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XxGreivousxX
10th April 2006, 4:33 AM
Fond but not in love.
So peacefully gliding up there.
The doves above.

My little Haiku.

Ethereal
10th April 2006, 4:35 AM
Um...so like, what? You want us to have a stroke for you? You wrote a "Haiku" (which fails to follow the 5, 7, 5 Haiku rule, by the way. :)). Why did you post that here? Post that in Fan-Fiction, where people are bound to be more receptive (read: forgiving) to it. That also counted as SPAM...As well as my post...Meh.

Cifala
10th April 2006, 4:36 AM
Nice. I used to write depressing ones. But, one poem I have read is my favourite so far...

"Remember, remember, the 5th of November
The Gunpowder Treason and plot;
I know of no reason why Gunpowder Treason
Should ever be forgot."

Mega Trickster
10th April 2006, 4:37 AM
It's 5,7,5 not 5,8,4 -.-

Other than that (which automatically doesnt make it a haiku) its nice. Just nice.

XxGreivousxX
10th April 2006, 4:37 AM
Not really, now adays the japanese don't care if it's 5-7-5, which sucks. They don't use the old tradition anymore. Google it if you want.

On second though here it is. (http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/)

Notice how almost all the haiku's break the rules.

Cifala
10th April 2006, 4:38 AM
Anyways, it's good. It still adds up to 17.

XxGreivousxX
10th April 2006, 4:40 AM
I take it you're SPPF's poem master. ;)

PS I have depressing poems with around 16 lines, not haiku.

SpaceFlare
10th April 2006, 4:44 AM
Post this in the fan fiction forum where more people will actually care to read it.

Quite nice though.

XxGreivousxX
10th April 2006, 4:45 AM
Oh, can somebody move this?

I knew I should've done that, but I thought fan fiction was only for stories.

Cifala
10th April 2006, 4:51 AM
I was a poem master. Now just Pokemon master and Jedi Master... Dunn Soral's the name.

XxGreivousxX
10th April 2006, 4:53 AM
Im just bigger than Jedi Master.

Mumage
10th April 2006, 6:05 AM
Neat- *Refrains from using the o atfer neat*

To be honest, it's alright considering that you did not follow the tradditional Haiku
format. And the versus still cooperate to one and another very gracefully.


-Kyuukon

Earl Kyrant
10th April 2006, 1:37 PM
I like it, it breaks tradition, yet it still flows smoothly from line to line.

Saki
10th April 2006, 1:42 PM
Fond but not in love.
So peacefully gliding up there.
The doves above.

My little Haiku.
Nice i like it ;381;

XxGreivousxX
10th April 2006, 3:52 PM
Thank you fo the comments guys, for Gr 9 school we had to make 5 of these and pick three of the best, not using tradition. I got a 17/20 (85%), and ita going in the yearbook in the Literature Section.