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Treeckoman7
17th June 2006, 2:00 AM
Allright, right now I'm the champion at a poetry contest in my school and I'm trying to get some of my poetry published. In seventh grade, next year afetr summer's over, I'm going to try and get my work out. Please review and tell me if I should.

Life

Equal in life is every man, but what is it that sets us a part?

Is it our hopes?

Our dreams?
Our ambitions?

Our family?

Questions, that guide us through our life are only among these.

Are we to be good?

To be bad?

To bring hope love and peace?

Or to stay in the shadows, an onlooker who helps and melts in the shadows?

Why are we who we are?

Why not them?

Why not him?

Or her?

Are we to live a life of happiness?

A life of service?

A life of mystery?

A life that ultimately leads to death in our self?

Why do we feel what others cannot grasp?

Why do we feel pain while others joy?

Hope while others misery?

Pride while others pity?


Why do we die?

Why do we ultimately have to let go of everything we know?

Why must this evil sadness fill our heart with a never ending bond?

Why?

The reason my child is because we are all set apart in our own ways. What we can grasp, yet not understand still fills us with questions abound.

And one final thing before I say farewell.

Death as in life shouldn’t be feared.

You shan’t fear a corpse unless you fear and unborn child.

For they aren’t yet here, but they know that in every man is a spirit that guides us and tells us the answers to our questions.

For it is in death that we are liberated from the burdens of life and that we are freed from our own constraints and wandering mind which continually asks us why…

katiekitten
17th June 2006, 2:13 AM
It is a really good poem, but as it doesn't really have anything to do with pokemon, it kinda should be in the non pokemon section. XD

I'm not a poet, so I can't help you much here. Ask Biz, he'll give you a good review. ;)

The Dean of Suds
17th June 2006, 3:29 AM
Great poem, but this should be in the non-pokemon fics section.
Over and out,;198;

Literate
17th June 2006, 4:38 AM
Equal in life is every man, but what is it that sets us apart?
The reason, my child, is because we are all set apart in our own ways.
You shan’t fear a corpse unless you fear an unborn child.

There you go! Some spelling mistakes you had. ^.^

And yeah, it should be in the non-pokemon section, but I bet he was scared to put it there because there are little comments left there. I was scared too. :p

~PEACE~

PsychoKadabra
17th June 2006, 7:50 PM
It makes people feel thoughtful. It's good!