View Full Version : My First Fanfic!

11th July 2006, 7:04 PM
~This involves pokeshipping,some advance shipping,& contestshipping~*Part one starts now*
It was a lovely day in Slateport City were Ash was riding his motercycle then stopped,he found some tables and chairs and a sign that said "Slateport City Outdoor Fastfood Place"
Ash:*sits on one of the chairs*one Diet Coke please miss
Girl:M'kay *walks away*
Ash*waits then sees a girl in long red hair(like a mermaid) in jeans,slandels,a tank top,and sea green eyes*
Ash:Hey Misty!
Girl(Misty):*takes a seat in one of the chairs*
Ash:Misty what happened to you,you look like some kind of city girl Brock would like!
Misty:What about you you have a motercycle!
Ash:It was for my 20th birthday!
Misty:So your 20,I'm 21
Ash:I dont care
Misty:whatever why I came here is cause....what happened to your pikachu?
Ash:He's at Prof.Oaks Lab we've been battiling fo the last nonstop for the past 5 years so I figured he should take a break and play with my my other pokemon
Misty:what about Brock?
Ash:he finally found a girl then got married
Misty:what about May&Max?
Ash:Don't know the whole gang split up as soon as turned 19
Misty:do you like May?
Ash:Are going to keep asking questions?
Girl:here you go sir*hands diet coke to Ash*
Ash:*takes a big gulp of his DietCoke*
Misty:well do you like May or not?
Misty:Oh really
Ash:Yeah really
Misty:*points to the other table*
Ash:*turns around*OMG!
~End of part 1~

11th July 2006, 7:37 PM
i don't see anything. You need to actually have the story or this will be closed.

11th July 2006, 7:40 PM
Yeah...unless you were planning to put the next chapter in your next post (which I don't think is allowed)

Also, it needs to be done before you make the topic.

Oh, and put it in the Shipping fics section next time

11th July 2006, 7:49 PM
I do sorry i messed up.

11th July 2006, 7:53 PM

Not to mention script fanfics like that aren't allowed here

11th July 2006, 7:54 PM
This kind of scripting isn't allowed. Please read the rules.

11th July 2006, 8:01 PM
Actually, scripting is allowed, but not this kind.

Here are some guidelines:
1. Please skip a line after each person talks.
2. This needs to be much longer- at least a page.
3. Don't use *action quotes* or shorthand, because that makes your story seem unprofessional- it's okay to make a humorous fic, but professionally!

11th July 2006, 8:20 PM
I don't get this one bit, put it into like, chapters. AND not to mention it looks like alphabet soup in script mode! Re-write it like those big chapter, non-scriptical, HP or Narnia books.

The Doctor
11th July 2006, 8:22 PM
Remember dear, the "This is my first fanfic" excuse just doesn't work anymore. You can do script format, but try and do it like Yoru Ryu or FlamingRuby; now those girls pull it off fine. Read their fics to get inspiration. OK?

11th July 2006, 8:27 PM
What Doc said! For surely!

11th July 2006, 9:46 PM
So if make it more longer and skip lines will my fanfic be allowed?

11th July 2006, 9:50 PM
Yeah and ask for this to be moved to the shipping fics section.

11th July 2006, 9:51 PM
So if make it more longer and skip lines will my fanfic be allowed?

Most likely, no.

If it's a humor fic and you do add description, then yes

12th July 2006, 1:07 AM
If you write well-written script, as in something properly formatted with stage directions and such, go ahead. But like this, no.