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Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 2:37 PM
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We all know of the Pokemon World, right? The place where aspiring trainers can venture out and make their dreams a reality? But, have you ever wondered what the Pokemon World is like 40 years later? Saying it is different would be an understatement. Why? because Team Rocket is back, and they are far worse than before.

Team Rocket's actions have put both Pokemon and people in danger. They conduct inhuman experiments such as combining Pokemon, or creating their own. This, combined with the fact that their attacks on many villages and cities kills Pokemon, has greatly reduced the population of Pokemon. They have nearly made humanity incapable of action against them, because of their iron grip on the world today and because of their immeasurable power. But, how exactly did this all start?

The world fell into crisis about 25 years before the beginning of the story that will soon unfold. And, it all started with a fire. A massive fire that blazed through Pinwheel Forest. The inhabitants, both Pokemon and people, fled in fear from it, and many did not make it out. They didn't understand what it meant. They didn't understand why it happened. But it was just Team Rocket's way of telling them that they had returned, and wouldn't screw anything up this time. Everyone was in a panic, and only a select few Team Rocket members know the reason behind their team's constant attacks...

Now, 15 years later, many people have appeared who have their own different views on the Rockets' control. The Rockets, of course, want as much power as possible, many of the citizens feel powerless and hopeless, and there is even a new group rising that is completely neutral and wants to see how things play out. One important group, however, is the rebels. Their goal is to stop the Rocket's plans for good, and to end the crisis that the Pokemon world has fallen into. They have Pokemon, weapons, and most of all, determination, and while their group is small, they have potential.

Now, it's time to make your decision. Will you be a lowly Rocket grunt, who, with enough power and determination, can rise in rank and maybe even learn Team Rocket's secret? Or, will you be a rebel, one who will attempt to restore order and peace to the land. The choice is yours, and with your choice, the fate of this world could be in your hands.



1. Follow the Serebii.net rules.
2. If you are going to say something that does not pertain to the RP while RPing, put parentheses and OOC around it so we know that your character is not speaking.
Example: Randall's Pidgeotto flapped its wings to create a gust of wind. (OOC: I may not be able to RP much today because I have to go to my friend's house.)
3. Don't use chatspeak. (omg, r, u, wtf, cul8tr, etc.)
4. You must tell me if you have to leave for a while and won't be able to RP.
5. Swearing is allowed, just keep it to a minimum.
6. Keep it PG-13.
7. Before you catch a new Pokemon, release a Pokemon, or evolve a Pokemon, you must get my permission first.
8. If you want to make a major change in the plot, you must get my permission first.
9. Don't bunny, unless you get the permission of the player you will be bunnying.

Inactive characters are colored red.

Players:
Rebels:
1. Zachary Davis - Epic-Inferno's character (Leader)
2. Jordan Stahlburg - AnThRaX2.0's character (chief assassin)
3. Eric Starstorm - Jonah the Great's character (Brute force specialist)
4. Star Vengeance - DragoniteA7X's character (Stealth expert)
5. Curtis Newland - Gallant's character (Scientific expert)
6. Legna James Krad - Legnak's character (Surveillance and Recon expert)
Rockets:
1. Max Blazewick - Charizardfan900's character (Grunt)
2. Isaac Calloway - J-star's character (Grunt)
3. Rae Tracker - rabidepicgoose's character (Grunt)
4. Jeffrey Izuki - SasoriSand's character (Grunt)
5. Cali Bohnam - Ippika726's character (Grunt)
6. Kyle Elyk - Charizard31's character (Grunt)

So, participants of this RP, this thread will be your chance to discuss the plot, plot ideas, ask the creator (myself, of course) questions, and to even get feedback on your writing! Go ahead and post!

SasoriSand
26th February 2012, 2:44 PM
RP's get a discussion thread? I had no idea...

On topic, how would we fight eachother (Rockets vs Rebels).

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 2:46 PM
Could you ask a little specifically please? That could mean "How will we end up fighting each other", "How will we actually fight?" or other things.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 2:48 PM
RP's get a discussion thread? I had no idea...

On topic, how would we fight eachother (Rockets vs Rebels).

You're in luck, I've had experience with PvP before. The gist of it is:

-Allow your character to be hurt. Don't say you're invincible--chances are you're not.
-Don't say that your attacks land. Unless the next poster says the attack landed, it missed.
-Be realistic about what hits and what doesn't. If you dodge a huge beam cannon blast, and then get hit by a Pidgey's Peck to compensate, both are just unrealistic and unimaginative.
-This should go without saying, but don't take actions for the opponent's character.

SasoriSand
26th February 2012, 2:48 PM
Specifiaclly, when both sides meet eachother, how would we decide the victor?
Fistfights? Pokemon Battles?

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 2:51 PM
A mix of the two, sort of. We'll be off fighting with weapons, while our Pokemon fight on their own, most likely. That's why Pokemon need to be smart as well as strong.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 3:04 PM
Would Kiyo be able to translate for others too?

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 3:05 PM
I don't see why he wouldn't be able to. Just have Kiyo say what our Pokemon say.

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 3:05 PM
Kiyo can't talk. It says so in the rules, and you have to obey the rules.

EDIT: Sorry, I was being a fail.

Sure, Kiyo can.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 3:12 PM
Hee Hee, Epic-Fail, no it's fine. I just found that extremely funny.
Kiyo is a she, Jonah.

SasoriSand
26th February 2012, 3:13 PM
Epic-Fail... lol.

What would happened if someone hasn't posted for a while?

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 3:20 PM
Dunno... I'm typing up a new post now though.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 3:26 PM
Someone would have to bring it back to life is all. This RP is so awesome though, it probably won't die.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 3:27 PM
I completely agree with Jonah, this RP is BEASTLY!!

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 3:29 PM
I think I'm going to have fun with having telepathic conversations with Kirlia this is a run on sentence isn't it.

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 3:32 PM
This RP is so awesome though, it probably won't die.


I completely agree with Jonah, this RP is BEASTLY!!


FFFFFF, you guys are so nice! *cries an ocean*

But, in all seriousness, Sasori, I don't think it will die, mainly because I'm going to try to post at least once a day. I've already posted twice today.

SasoriSand
26th February 2012, 3:34 PM
What I meant is that some people haven't posted at all. What do we do with them if they don't post for like, say a week?

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 3:35 PM
What I meant is that some people haven't posted at all. What do we do with them if they don't post for like, say a week?

I'll PM them about it, unless they're inactive in general. If they are inactive in general, and haven't been on for a long time, we'll just have to take them out, I suppose. I don't really know yet.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 3:37 PM
Maybe we won't have to take them out. If they don't post, we just won't interact with them. That way they can join in later if they want with no one having obstacles.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 3:44 PM
I think that's a good idea, I am going to be at camp for a whole month throughout the summer, so Epic can put me on Hiatus or something.

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 3:49 PM
Okay, sure, that works.

Rabid, thanks for telling us. I really don't want people to be inactive before telling me.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 3:55 PM
Oh yeah, in case anyone interacts with me, I'm inactive on all weekdays except Friday.

EDIT: Epic, Grotle is a tortoise. Terrapins are freshwater turtles.

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 4:05 PM
EDIT: Epic, Grotle is a tortoise. Terrapins are freshwater turtles.

Whoops. Edited.

Also, since this thread can also be used for writing feedback, I was wondering if someone could review my past few posts. I'm still growing as a writer, and I'd love to know what I could do better.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 4:12 PM
Hey can you read my post? Give me some feedback.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 4:13 PM
Epic: The only problems I see is that your posts are ever-so-slightly bunnyish. Also, it would help to spread your paragraphs more, like when you start talking again, so it's not just a big block of text that people tl;dr.

Goose: Your plot moves a bit fast. There's no harm in slowing down a little. Otherwise, good work.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 4:15 PM
Thank you for your feedback, it helps a lot.

SasoriSand
26th February 2012, 4:16 PM
Jonah. Maker of an RP and a Fanfic

Both have Deoxys infecting things

This RP and the Fanfic both have a Broadsword...

Coincindence? Also feedback on mine would be nice.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 4:20 PM
I use a lot of common elements between my modiums of media. Alliteration is fun.

The grammar's a bit off, Sasori, but the storyline is solid. It helps to proofread, make sure you don't make a dumb mistake.

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 4:23 PM
Hey can you read my post? Give me some feedback.

Maybe you could describe things just a bit better. The Gardevoir, for example. You merely said that the Gardevoir was beautiful. But, what does it look like? How is it different from other Pokemon? Seeing this part of a post I made on a different RP may help you.




I looked back over to where she had been standing before, only to notice that she was instead throwing a Pokeball, while shouting "Go, Fleur!" As the Pokeball hit the ground, a red light was released from it, only to materialize into the shape of a massive Pokemon. The light flew off of it, only to reveal a tremendous Pokemon with a long neck. It was a pale green in color, and around its neck was a pink flower, which had petals tipped with a snow white. "Megaaa!" the Meganium cried, while flashing a smile similar to that of its master.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 4:32 PM
Inferno, the amount of detail you use is insanely substantial. Combine it with my vocabulary, and you get something borderline cataclysmic.

DragonA7X
26th February 2012, 6:02 PM
Quick question, when do I make my next post?
As you can suspect, this is my first RP on Serebii forums but I am clueless.
Nevermind my ignorant question. I am enjoying this rp so far.

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 6:30 PM
Despite the fact that you said to ignore, I think it might help to tell you that you can put another post whenever you want.

DragonA7X
26th February 2012, 6:32 PM
Alright. Thank you for letting me know. I will do another soon.
By the way, anyone have some feedback so I can expand?

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 7:13 PM
Sorry it took so long to give some feedback. I like the style, but it's not necessary to specify that Zorua is talking with telepathy. If he's talking at all we can guess that. Also, detail is a bit lacking. Other than that, it's pretty good.

DragonA7X
26th February 2012, 7:17 PM
Alright, I shall improve on that. Thank you.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 9:23 PM
Well, I'm new to this too, but as long as you ask Epic-Inferno, you can manipulate the plot a bunch.

DragonA7X
26th February 2012, 9:31 PM
Alrighty, I cannot wait to see how this goes.

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 9:45 PM
Yep, like Rabid said, you can make big changes in the plot of you want to, you just need to PM me first to ask for permission. Also, like Jonah said, you can post whenever you want. Just thought I might clear that up for you. Also, just so you guys know, reddog95 said that he wouldn't be able to post until Wednesday. Just keep that in mind.

rabidepicgoose
26th February 2012, 9:51 PM
Okay, I will always tell you guys if I'll be unable to post. I will be unable to post throughout most of the summer, as my life is jam packed.

Examples:

Family camp (Epic is by BFF in real life and she's going too): Around june 8-12
Summer camp: Sometime in late June- Late July
Road trip: Most of August

I will try to post whenever I can, I will bring a notebook so I can write down any ideas that fly by.

DragonA7X
26th February 2012, 9:53 PM
Alright and I may not be able to post some days especially Saturday because I am usually busy on Saturdays

J-star
26th February 2012, 9:59 PM
Cool, we have a discussion thread. Well I'm pretty excited about this (my first) RP. Like I said in my RP post my Internet has been weird as of late, hopefully it won't be a problem. Besides that I'm usually free everyday but I do have stuff to do on Monday's and wednesdays.

I should have my next post up today

Jonah the Slaking
26th February 2012, 10:04 PM
Well, what are you all waiting for? Rebels, to Mt. Chimney! Rockets, to wherever! The RP must pick up steam!

SasoriSand
26th February 2012, 10:05 PM
I already posted... and I need someone to interact with,

Squiddly Dee
26th February 2012, 10:05 PM
Dragonite: Okay, thinks for informing me. I'll keep that in mind.

J-Star: Okay, great! I really loved your first one, as your character's personality was expressed very well.

DragonA7X
26th February 2012, 10:27 PM
Oh and Epic, I don't think I can rp today because I am pretty busy today

rabidepicgoose
27th February 2012, 11:47 PM
I posted again.

Thoughts?

Squiddly Dee
28th February 2012, 12:08 AM
Okay, I'm going to go ahead and review the posts of everyone who has posted recently.

J-Star: Great post, as usual. Your character is very well defined, and his personality sticks very closely to your great SU. It was very fun to read. I can't think of anything that could be improved about it at the moment.

Anthrax: Pretty good. I know this is your first post in an RP for a long time, so I won't be too hard on you. The characters were very well done and it was very fun reading about their interactions, especially Kaizer. There were a few grammar and punctuation errors, though, and you may want to watch out for these in the future. Good job.

Ippika: First of all, your character's personality is a very interesting and original take on a Rocket member. A completely bored TR member? Awesome! The description was very good, and I especially liked the part where Cali was describing the man's eyes. However, I think that the post was a bit rushed, and everything happened a little too quickly. Slow down a bit, and your posts may improve in quality.

Gallant: I honestly can't find anything wrong with this one. Great description, great characterization... nothing much to say here other than it was great.

Charizardfan: Like I said with some of the other posts, your characterization is spot-on. I really love the way all of the characters interact. However, I saw two spelling errors I thought I might point out.


The pokemon travvled quickly a cross the room

Should be "The pokemon traveled quickly across the room."


My Houndour opende dits mouth

Should be "My Houndour opened its mouth."

They're only minor things, but watch out for them in the future. Also, you may want to improve on your description, especially in the battle. Instead of saying "The flames knocked the Rattata back," you could say something like "The Houndour spit our blazing embers, which sent the Rattata flying backwards." Overall, it was a great post.

Rabid: Great post. You improved on your description, like I had told you to before (Though it was IRL). One thing I would like to comment on is your characterization. All of the characters were very well defined, especially Aric. But, there was one exception: Your own character, Rae. She doesn't seem to be acting like how you described her to act in your SU. You may want to try to fix this up next time you post. Also, thus is only a minor thing, but you had Sakai speaking in your post, but psychic types can only use telepathy. I'd appreciate it if you could fix that.

Great job, you guys! I'm very impressed! :)

rabidepicgoose
28th February 2012, 12:24 AM
Since my thoughts are in italics, I used quotation marks to put it through, Aric also used the serum on her.

SasoriSand
28th February 2012, 12:29 AM
I posted and I feel like I'm doing a horrible job...

rabidepicgoose
28th February 2012, 12:32 AM
Nonsense, you did great!

SasoriSand
28th February 2012, 12:33 AM
Yay *Smile Face*

Mainly the reasons I feel like I'm doing bad is because I get scared easily...

By anything really...

Squiddly Dee
28th February 2012, 12:41 AM
Well, I'll go ahead and review yours then, Sasori. I'm not going to review Jameson's as I already did through VM.

Sasori: I don't see why you did so terrible, first of all. Your character's personality was spot-on, it was fairly well described, but most of all, it was funny. I can't exactly explain why, but it was highly amusing to read. Great work. *pats on back*

SasoriSand
28th February 2012, 12:42 AM
Yayyy... Funny...?

I don't see..

Firecracker - Police with Machine Gun and Flamethrower

Oh...

Which reminds me... Is there gonna be some huge final battle?

Squiddly Dee
28th February 2012, 12:46 AM
Which reminds me... Is there gonna be some huge final battle?

That depends. I don't have a plot planned out or anything, it's all going to be everyone's creation. Because of that, maybe, maybe not.

rabidepicgoose
28th February 2012, 12:57 AM
By the way my character is surprised easily, Epic. You'll get to see her headstrong nature soon though. By the way Sakai used teleport.

Squiddly Dee
28th February 2012, 1:29 AM
Now, without further ado, it's time for another round of... the reviewing game!

*ahem* Okay, lame jokes aside, time to review.

Anthrax: Your post was good, but I felt like the battle was lacking. You didn't really use any description, and the Gyarados went down in two hits. Two? Keep in mind that Pokemon here won't go down as easily as in the games. If you need any more help with battles, drop me a PM.

Dr. Classy
28th February 2012, 1:38 AM
@ Epic-Inferno
I completely agree with yah.

No I'm not being an a** kisser ya'll
lol jk

DragonA7X
29th February 2012, 1:25 AM
Epic, I have bad news... I don't think I can rp until Sunday. I have been very busy with school and everything and I apologize.

Squiddly Dee
29th February 2012, 1:56 AM
Nite: I understand. Like I would say, life gets in the way sometime. I can wait.

Jonah the Slaking
29th February 2012, 6:08 PM
Guys, I have a proposition. How about when we post, we do like Sasori's been doing and tell our faction? That way, people can be sure, even in the early parts, who we're sided with and won't have to check the SU thread.

Charizardfan900
29th February 2012, 7:18 PM
Hey I'm slightly concerened about the Rockets.


When will all the characters who a Rockets get toghether? After the rebels reveal themselves.


Also I might make a post right now.

Squiddly Dee
29th February 2012, 10:03 PM
Hey I'm slightly concerened about the Rockets.


When will all the characters who a Rockets get toghether? After the rebels reveal themselves.


Also I might make a post right now.

Well, that's not my decision - I don't have a plot planned out for this game. You can decide when you want them all to meet.

SasoriSand
29th February 2012, 10:04 PM
I'm kinda concerned because not many people have signed on and made their first post...

Squiddly Dee
29th February 2012, 10:16 PM
Actually, everyone who signed up has made at least one post. But, it's true, the fact that they haven't made many posts concerns me...

rabidepicgoose
2nd March 2012, 2:38 AM
I'm having a writers block, so my next post may be late. Sorry! :(

Squiddly Dee
2nd March 2012, 3:50 AM
Okay, Rabid, good to know.

This is a good time for me to make an announcement without receiving an infraction. Reddog95 has decided to quit the RP. This is because the post he had been making was deleted accidentally, causing him to lose his motivation. If you wish, you may go over to his page and say your goodbyes.

Ippika726
2nd March 2012, 5:56 AM
Oh man, my post was really really long. I hope that's not a bad thing... I tried to go into as much detail about fusion as possible. I did forget to mention that when they are fused, they both receive likenesses and qualities of both pokemon, this includes memories from both pokemon (although lots of memories have been forgotten due to the strength of the shock), the look of both pokemon (it's up to you how they look), and the powers of the pokemon (like Zack's Wartortik).
If there are any holes in this, please tell me and we can work it out. ^__^

Squiddly Dee
2nd March 2012, 12:31 PM
Well, I don't see any problems with it. It was well done. But, I'll let the others voice their opinion, as well.

Jonah the Slaking
2nd March 2012, 9:59 PM
I think it makes sense, and it could work out for Zach since both of his Pokemon only evolve one more time, so Blastantula (just made that up) will be plausible.

Also, don't tell me this RP is dying.

Squiddly Dee
3rd March 2012, 4:47 PM
Blastantula is an awesome name. :P

It won't die. It can't die. I won't let it. But, the only problem is that I can't really do anything else until more rebels arrive... :/

SasoriSand
3rd March 2012, 6:20 PM
Ya I'm waiting for the Rebels before I post again

Squiddly Dee
3rd March 2012, 6:22 PM
Fortunately, DragoniteA7X has told me about a post idea she has that she will put up sometime tomorrow. So, no dying for this RP.

DragonA7X
3rd March 2012, 10:55 PM
I finished my post. I hope you all enjoyed.
Any advice for me? It would mean so much if you did give me your opinion.

Squiddly Dee
3rd March 2012, 10:57 PM
Okay, now, it's that time again... review time!

Nite: Your post was good. The characters were done well, as Mr. Briney acted like an old man should, and it was fun seeing Zacky up to his old tricks again. But, the only problem I found with your post was that you didn't describe the crash. All you said was that the ship crashed into the iceberg. I would have liked to see you describe both the iceberg itself as well as the crash.

SasoriSand
3rd March 2012, 11:00 PM
Nite some more description would be nice but besides that great

DragonA7X
3rd March 2012, 11:22 PM
Thank you for the feedback guys.
As Epic suggested, I added more detail to the crash.

Squiddly Dee
3rd March 2012, 11:26 PM
Nite: It's a lot better now. I hope you continue to describe things well in the future. Good job.

DragonA7X
4th March 2012, 12:49 AM
Epic - Thank you very much.

Rebels - I talked to Epic though PM and I have a surprise for all of you in the rp. Stay tuned.

Squiddly Dee
4th March 2012, 1:31 PM
Guess what time it is? Review time!

Charizardfan: This was a very short post, and it wasn't your best, but it was still good. The fact that it was quite short makes this difficult to review, as you may not have enough room to make the improvements I would suggest. But, I will say that what is perhaps one of the best parts of all of your posts still shines through: Characterization. The character interaction was very strong.

DragonA7X
4th March 2012, 2:45 PM
I have finished yet another post. A review would be great.

Also all rebel members may choose one of Mr. Briney's pokemon

The ones available are as follows

Nyx the Frillish
Arlyn the Piplup
Fuyuko the Spheal
Quan the Qwillfish

Squiddly Dee
4th March 2012, 2:49 PM
(Before I review Nite's, I just want to let everyone know that there is also a Lombre, but it's already mine.)

Nite: Your post was excellent. The death scene was great, and so was the description. But, I'd like it if you could edit the post and add a very short section at the end where Star arrives at Mt. Chimney. That way, I won't be forced to bunny her in my next post.

DragonA7X
4th March 2012, 2:57 PM
Epic - I edited the post to where I arrive at the summit. I hope that doesn't count as bunnying.

Squiddly Dee
4th March 2012, 3:01 PM
Nite: Nope, that isn't bunnying. Don't you worry now.

Also, you guys, just thought I'd say that I'm going to start typing up a post now. It'll be up sometime today.

SasoriSand
4th March 2012, 3:46 PM
Wow... You all get a water poke.. That will really counter me... (Aquarius the Frillish) #Sarcasm

All joking aside Nite that was reall great... Almost makes me want to be a rebel because MR. BRINEY HAS A PIPLUP! *Sniffle* Empoleon.. *Sniffle*

DragonA7X
4th March 2012, 3:53 PM
SasoriSand - Aw... Sorry. I chose all water pokemon for Mr. Briney because he is or should I say WAS a sailor.

Time for me to review a post.

SasoriSand - I really like the new post but I wish there was a little more. It was kind of short in my opinion.

Squiddly Dee
4th March 2012, 3:54 PM
Hey, would anyone be willing to review mine? Even if I'm the GM, my posts can't be perfect...

SasoriSand
4th March 2012, 3:57 PM
Nite - Part of the reason it was so short was because I forgot J-Star was at Iron Island... *Facepalm* So I'm asleep till he or another Rocket comes around... Or until I feel like it

Epic - Very good! But I'm too nice of a person so.. ya...

Squiddly Dee
4th March 2012, 5:37 PM
So, I posted several times, and I'd like feedback, mainly on my most recent one.

Speaking of my most recent one, it may have been my favorite post to write just because of Ren's dialogue. I love her already. <3

DragonA7X
4th March 2012, 5:43 PM
Epic - I really like the post with Ren. Best post by you so far.

Squiddly Dee
4th March 2012, 6:46 PM
Yay! I finished another post!

This one is another long one, and it has Ren's backstory. Feedback would be appreciated.

DragonA7X
5th March 2012, 12:45 AM
Epic - I really enjoyed that segment. Ren's dialog is really something.
Bravo!

Squiddly Dee
5th March 2012, 12:58 AM
Writing her dialogue is sooooo fun! :D

DragonA7X
5th March 2012, 2:57 AM
Writing about Zacky's illusions is fun too!

Also for the rebels, The remaining pokemon are as follows.
Fuyuko the Spheal (female)
Arlyn the Piplup (male)
Quan the Qwilfish (male)

Jonah the Slaking
5th March 2012, 9:28 PM
I edited my SU post, so Nyx is in my roster. When I started this game, I originally planned to get a Kingdra, so this works out (except the "Seadra only evolves by trading" thing). I also kept her name as Nyx and established her as a female.

Squiddly Dee
5th March 2012, 10:04 PM
Thanks, Jonah. I'm babysitting right now, so I won't be able to edit in Ren's info until a bit later.

rabidepicgoose
7th March 2012, 2:37 AM
Hey, critique my latest post please.

Squiddly Dee
7th March 2012, 2:49 AM
Rabid: I hate to say this, but I really don't want to sugarcoat things. Your post is very mediocre in comparison to your last one. The description in this one isn't very good, admittedly. Also, your post breaks one of the most important rules of the RP. This is because you must PM me before catching a new Pokemon or evolving a Pokemon in case I think it is too early for a Pokemon to evolve, in case the Pokemon you wish to catch should not be found in that area, or in case I think it is too early for you to catch a Pokemon. I'll let it slide this time, but next time you break the rules there will be consequences.

rabidepicgoose
7th March 2012, 1:55 PM
Silly Epic, I didn't catch any Pokemon. Also it's a Buneary, which is found in Eterna Forest.

Squiddly Dee
7th March 2012, 9:59 PM
You were preparing to. You're quite easy to read, you know.

rabidepicgoose
7th March 2012, 10:42 PM
Yep, I was going to Pm you about it today.

Brief Pokemon description:

Name: Sentoki

Species: Buneary

Gender: Female

Moves:
Dizzy Punch, Bounce, Quick attack, Double kick

She will be caught in a great ball, and is also somewhat stubborn.

So can I catch her?

Also I wasn't breaking any rules, because I did not catch her yet, and was going to ask.

Squiddly Dee
7th March 2012, 10:51 PM
Give me personality info, and I'll allow you to.

Like I said, there won't be any consequences this time, but next time, PM me BEFORE the Pokemon is introduced. It must be through PM.

J-star
7th March 2012, 10:54 PM
Hey, I got a question about new moves. So when we want our pokemon to learn a new move do we need to PM you or is it up to us to decide when they learn a new move.

Squiddly Dee
7th March 2012, 10:56 PM
Good question. If you think it's reasonable, then you don't need to PM me. If you think I may have a beef with it, though, PM me just to be safe. You're not required to PM me.

Jonah the Slaking
8th March 2012, 9:16 PM
I see that stuff is starting to go DOWN on the RP thread! Dibs on fighting Jeffery (if it's ok with Sasori).

SasoriSand
8th March 2012, 10:31 PM
Ohhhh heelllll yaaaaaaaaa

Hmm... no one seems to be jumping me about finding Mt. Chimmney...

Squiddly Dee
8th March 2012, 11:01 PM
I totally jumped when I saw that, I just didn't want to double post.

Actually, Jonah, if it's alright with you, maybe I could use Rafe and you could use Broadsword and we could DOUBLE BATTLE HIM! AND HE COULD USE BOTH HIS POKEMON!

SasoriSand
8th March 2012, 11:24 PM
Oh great >.< Rafe is gonna own me...

Psychic, Ghost < Dark

Squiddly Dee
8th March 2012, 11:27 PM
Not if you think of a good strategy...

SasoriSand
8th March 2012, 11:30 PM
Hmmmmmmmm... That is true... time to research ou too

Squiddly Dee
8th March 2012, 11:31 PM
Actually, I may use Ren instead. I'm not really sure.

SasoriSand
8th March 2012, 11:33 PM
*Facepalm* Why did I think Rafe was the Zorua...

Now I might have a chance... Or... heheh

Squiddly Dee
8th March 2012, 11:36 PM
Rafe does have that Bite attack, though... (Zorua is Zacky, by the way)

Also, there has been another drop-out, unfortunately. Zorocario has dropped out. This is because he simply can't do this and fill out college applications. Feel free to go to his profile and say your goodbyes.

SasoriSand
8th March 2012, 11:41 PM
Wow....

Well now I don't have to worry about my Psyshock/Hex not working.

Squiddly Dee
8th March 2012, 11:43 PM
Nope, you don't :P

Okay, I have a concern. There is someone I know who has been following the RP and asked if he could join if we ever had less than 6 people on one side. I was thinking about giving him a limit of 2 days to sign up as a rebel. Do you think I should?

SasoriSand
8th March 2012, 11:59 PM
Ya since there have been people that have been leaving...

Squiddly Dee
9th March 2012, 2:15 AM
Okay, I sent him a PM. I'll let you guys know when I get a response.

Sasori, I love your new avatar.

SasoriSand
9th March 2012, 2:19 AM
XD thanks I just found it.

Hmmm... I'm waiting for someone to post so i can write the next part...

Jonah the Slaking
9th March 2012, 8:44 PM
I think the double battle is a great idea, especially since Broadsword still hasn't gotten a chance to prove himself yet. Let's do that ASAP. I'll write up a post, you guys feel free to respond to it.

Squiddly Dee
9th March 2012, 9:16 PM
I can't respond to it for a while, I'm sorry. I'm babysitting some kids, and after that, I have to go somewhere. I'll write a post as soon as I get back.

Also, tomorrow, I'll be at my girlfriend's house until the next morning, so I can't really post tomorrow, either. I'm so sorry.

SasoriSand
9th March 2012, 11:11 PM
One. I'm going on a sleepover on Saturday and Sunday so I might not be on

Two. IT'S TIME TO FIGHT!

Squiddly Dee
10th March 2012, 12:07 AM
Okay, I posted. And, Rafe's having some Spiderman action! He must be Spider-turtle.

Jonah the Slaking
10th March 2012, 1:38 AM
POSTED. Too bad Sasori's gone. But I pwned his Frillish.

SpiderTurtle! Spiderturtle! Does whatever a spiderturtle does!

Squiddly Dee
10th March 2012, 1:40 AM
Lol, spiderturtle. :P

I really want to make another battle post, but I won't because I want to give Sasori a chance to fight back.

DragonA7X
10th March 2012, 1:57 AM
I have bad news, I have writers block. :P
It may be a while before I post again.

Squiddly Dee
10th March 2012, 2:00 AM
Okay, I lied. I did post again, haha. :P I call this one "Battle of Spiderturtle and his rather girly partner: Part IV."

Nite: So sorry to hear that. If you want me to help, I'm here.

SasoriSand
12th March 2012, 10:13 PM
So........ The only real people that are posting are me, Dragonite, Epic, and Jonah....

Squiddly Dee
12th March 2012, 10:17 PM
Well...

- Rabid has really terrible writer's block
- Jameson has to work really hard on college
- Gallant is inactive

And, as for everyone else, I don't know what the deal is...

legnak
12th March 2012, 11:17 PM
Hi everyone, I'm the new guy that was added.
I'm just posting this so everyone that didn't know knows now.

sorry for not posting as soon as I was accepted, I have been constantly hit by storms, now they are gone so I can keep up now.

SasoriSand
12th March 2012, 11:18 PM
Since when did you guys ever have a Serviper Squad?

legnak
12th March 2012, 11:19 PM
it was something from kanto and that was a dream

here in my characters history:

Legna was forced to join the rockets and was assigned to be a fighter pilot belonging to the 9382nd Interceptor squadron known as the "Seviper Squadron" or also known as "The Imortal squadron" due to never losing a wingman or failing a mission, He deflected away from the Team when he was assigned to shoot down a civilian passenger plane, refusing to do so, he was attacked by his wingmen, whom he shot and killed, along with the airborne warning and control system (AWACS for short) with little effort, he managed to make it as far as the Hoenn region before crash landing into the ruins of the Mauville city gym when running out of fuel from evading two other squads, he escaped with minor injury by bailing out and landed into a nearby tree,

Squiddly Dee
12th March 2012, 11:59 PM
Thanks for posting, Legnak! It's alright, I understand your plight. Now, would you like your post reviewed? Actually, never mind. You have no choice in the matter, ehehe...

Legnak: Your post is very interesting. Compared to other rebel starting posts, it was a completely different take on the situation, and I like that a lot. However, there's one thing that I suggest that you do. Double space between sentences. It makes it less cluttered and easier to read. Here's an example:


"Okay, All systems are go, Seviper squad, what is your planes status?" I asked as I went through the final checks in my plane.
"All systems are clear, let's go." The rest of the squadron said before they made it to the Runway.
It was nearing sundown as I pulled to the end of the runway to take off, the skyline of Lavender Town helped out by blocking the sun out of my view as I started to push harder on the throttle to gain speed. Before I pulled up to escape the clutches of gravity, I looked to my left to see the remains of the powerplant that had powered the nearby towns long before the place was converted into a military base. My wingmen then overtook me with full afterburners, the bluish glow from thier engines outshined the darkening sky.

Instead, I suggest you do this:


"Okay, All systems are go, Seviper squad, what is your planes status?" I asked as I went through the final checks in my plane.

"All systems are clear, let's go." The rest of the squadron said before they made it to the Runway.

It was nearing sundown as I pulled to the end of the runway to take off, the skyline of Lavender Town helped out by blocking the sun out of my view as I started to push harder on the throttle to gain speed. Before I pulled up to escape the clutches of gravity, I looked to my left to see the remains of the powerplant that had powered the nearby towns long before the place was converted into a military base. My wingmen then overtook me with full afterburners, the bluish glow from thier engines outshined the darkening sky.

legnak
13th March 2012, 12:10 AM
No problem, i'll do that right now.

DragonA7X
15th March 2012, 1:20 AM
Err... Epic, I can't rp at all from Thursday-Sunday because I am going away... Sorry for the inconvenience.

Squiddly Dee
15th March 2012, 1:21 AM
That's okay. :) I am fully aware that all of you have real lives, and are real people. No one is perfect.

Putting that aside, did you guys like my post?

legnak
15th March 2012, 2:06 AM
I enjoyed reading it.

But for Ren's voice, i keep picturing an Australian voice for it.

Squiddly Dee
15th March 2012, 2:08 AM
I don't really know what kind of accent I was aiming to give Ren... Someone else who read a posr with her in it said that they thought it sounded carribean.

DragonA7X
15th March 2012, 2:11 AM
I really enjoyed your post Epic. I imagine Ren with a pirate voice.

Also, thank you for understanding about me not going to be on.

Squiddly Dee
15th March 2012, 2:17 AM
*imagines Ren as a pirate*

That's very silly. I like it. :P

No problem. :)

Jonah the Slaking
15th March 2012, 10:33 PM
I imagine Ren as a redneck.

I posted again, and Eric is back to his senses now.

Charizardfan900
16th March 2012, 4:49 PM
Sorry guys I haven't posted recently, just don't know what to post.

Any hints?

J-star
16th March 2012, 6:41 PM
That was the same for me Charizardfan and for your question. You could always just make your character go off and train somewhere I guess. But yeah I'd also like to apologize for my lack of posts and I'm wondering if anyone would mind reviewing my last post.

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 10:10 PM
It's okay. :) Everyone has bust schedules sometimes. I'm just glad you guys could get posts in.

Anyway, it's that time yet again: Reviewing time!! :D

Charizardfan: This was by no means a bad post. However, it was very, very short. I'd like to see longer posts from you in the future.

J-Star: A great example of a training post. I could clearly tell what Isaac was thinking, and it was nice to see more of Liz's personality. However, I think you should try to work on describing attacks more clearly. For example, you said that Lume used Ember on the Roserade. What did the attack look like? How did Lume create it? How did he fire it? Considering these questions may help you in the future.

Sasori:
OOC: Sasori...why? We were ALL attacking the helicopter, and it suddenly is just gone? Where's the logic in that?

My thoughts exactly. This post makes absolutely no sense. I don't want to be rude, but you really, really need to edit it. Or maybe even delete it. I'm sorry, guys, but I cannot post until Sasori does this, as our posts would conflict.

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 10:36 PM
One. The helicoptor was gone before any of you posted about the battle with the helocopter.

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 10:42 PM
No it wasn't. You never said anything about it leaving. Go back and check, it's true.

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 10:45 PM
Wait what the... I seriously thought I put it in...

So which post do you want me to delete/edit again

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 10:48 PM
Your most recent one, please.

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 10:49 PM
Aight I shall edit it... Again I REALLY thought I put it that the Heli went away

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 10:50 PM
That's okay. Everyone makes mistakes sometimes. :)

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 10:57 PM
EDITED and you guys are going to hate me for MASSIVE amounts of rock and wind

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 11:02 PM
Oh my. :O

Thanks for editing. I'll go post soon.

EDIT: That still doesn't work...

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 11:05 PM
Please explain to me how it does not work...

Did I forget to mention we flew back -.-

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 11:08 PM
Okay, it works, never mind. I'm a tad disappointed that we couldn't finish the Archeops battle 'cause I had something planned for it, but it's fine...

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 11:09 PM
Seeing as the Diamonix hit the helicopter I'm fairl certain if I didn't bail...

We woulda all died

Squiddly Dee
16th March 2012, 11:13 PM
Oh, right, I forgot about that little detail. :P

I guess the next post will be me going like "MOTHER OF GOD WHAT IS THAT THING"

SasoriSand
16th March 2012, 11:14 PM
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL Which reminds me...

I reall hope I didn't kill ou gus XD

legnak
17th March 2012, 1:06 AM
Just an FYI, I have already crashed by this point.

Jonah the Slaking
17th March 2012, 1:56 AM
I decided on a hybrid for ma bad self. You all will see him sometime in the future.

rabidepicgoose
17th March 2012, 4:15 PM
Hey Epic, I am having a really horrible writers block, so please spare me from your nags for awhile, I just need time to think. Maybe another week. (Hopefully less)

legnak
19th March 2012, 8:46 PM
Jonah the Great, I don't know if you noticed this but I used Diamonix in your RP as my main character.

Squiddly Dee
19th March 2012, 11:49 PM
So, guys, how do you feel about the fact that I narrated from Streaker's POV?

legnak
20th March 2012, 2:13 AM
That was awesome, I'm thinking I should do the Same for Diamonix and the rest of my team whenever they are talking or on battle.

Squiddly Dee
20th March 2012, 2:16 AM
I would highly encourage it! It helps you narrate from a different perspective, get a better sense of your Pokemon, and makes it more interesting for readers! But, only do it when your Pokemon is off doing something in a different place than your character (Ex: Streaker is narrating because she and Zach are in two different places, doing two different things)

legnak
20th March 2012, 2:37 AM
Alright, will do that, as in do his own thing when he is patroling.

J-star
20th March 2012, 2:40 AM
Hmm, guys I think I need a little advice? See I've typed up a battle scene and that's only half of the battle. But now that I think about it I could probably skip the battle completely. So I guess I'm asking how do/would you guys decide what (NPC) battles are worth writing in your posts?

legnak
20th March 2012, 2:52 AM
I say any battle is worth posting because it gives a more in depth look on how both the Pokémon and the trainer work together.

J-star
20th March 2012, 3:10 AM
Okay, thanks, that's a really valid point. I might just post it, probably tomorrow. I'll see what anyone else has to say first though.

Squiddly Dee
20th March 2012, 3:12 AM
I agree, post the battle. It could also get your Pokes some experience, and will give you practice writing battle scenes, and thus, would let us give you more feedback for the future.

legnak
20th March 2012, 3:38 AM
I don't wanna sound like a dumb dumb but, Is it possible if I could go find a Seedot after the battle? Obtaining the Spheal reminded me of my old Diamond version team which was a Walrien, Steelix, Aron, Shiftry, Nidoking, and Staraptor (which occasionally replaced with Pidgeot or my Salamence) R.I.P my Diamond Version.

Squiddly Dee
20th March 2012, 4:28 AM
You can find one sometime after the battle, but not directly after. You'll have to wait a while to get another catch because you got Fuyuko very recently.

legnak
20th March 2012, 6:10 AM
Alright, I wasn't meaning like I turn around and go "oh look, a seedot!" I think I'm gonna wait until Diamonix evolves until I catch one.

SasoriSand
20th March 2012, 10:23 AM
J-Star when you see this please mak anothr post

J-star
20th March 2012, 8:39 PM
You're in luck Sasori, cause I had planned on posting today. The conclusion of the battle should be posted in a couple days. Anyway, would anyone mind reviewing my post and maybe offering some tips for writing battle scenes.

Squiddly Dee
20th March 2012, 10:21 PM
Alright, I wasn't meaning like I turn around and go "oh look, a seedot!" I think I'm gonna wait until Diamonix evolves until I catch one.

That probably won't be for a while. I'd say you should be allowed to catch one a bit before, unless you really want to wait that long.

Also, J-star, great post! I'm so glad you listened to my feedback from before. I can't think of anything you could improve at the moment.

Would anyone be willing to review my posts? Even if I'm the GM, I can't be perfect...

legnak
22nd March 2012, 2:20 AM
I like your posts, it reminds me that I NEED to improve my posting back to the quality of my first post.

Squiddly Dee
22nd March 2012, 2:48 AM
Aww, thanks! :D I'm glad you've decided to work harder.

Okay, you guys, I have an announcement to make.

In some f my posts, there will be a section where I give an interlude from the POV of a Rocket member, someone I made up. This is because she will be plot-relevant later, and there are some things I need to reveal using this method that can't be revealed normally.

Squiddly Dee
22nd March 2012, 4:58 AM
Okay, so I made the first post of that TR member I mentioned. Please, give feedback. And, not just stuff like "Oh, I like it," I want to know what I can improve.

Jonah the Slaking
22nd March 2012, 10:24 PM
I think that it should've been less sudden that it was revealed she could talk to Pokemon. Like, say it in her exposition or something.

Squiddly Dee
22nd March 2012, 10:29 PM
Ehh.. could you be a bit more specific, please?

Jonah the Slaking
23rd March 2012, 2:23 AM
Well, you said "Oh, and did I mention that I could talk to Pokemon?" (not verbatim, of course) It should be looked into more thoroughly. Like, say this instead:


I have always been able to talk to Pokemon--not just Psychic types, but all Pokemon. It started when I was *insert age here*, when I *insert backstory here*. *insert some more backstory here* *and a little more over here* *and a dash over here for good measure*.

It needs to be smoothly brought in, not just spelled out.

Squiddly Dee
23rd March 2012, 2:42 AM
Well, I want to save her backstory for later. And, there's no specific reason why she can.

Squiddly Dee
23rd March 2012, 3:27 AM
Okay, you guys, I added something to the character list found on the RP thread and the Discussion thread: The inactive character listings! On the list, if your character's name is colored red, you are considered inactive, meaning that you'd better get a post in soon. I'll also use this post as an announcement to the Rockets: Every Rocket member excluding J-Star and Ippika726 is inactive. Get your posts in. I'm serious. But, the rebels have inactive players as well: Everyone excluding Jonah the Great, Legnak, and myself is inactive. So, everyone who is not Jonah the Great, Legnak, Ippika726, or J-Star, please post again soon. With only 5 active people, I'm not sure we'll be able to keep this RP alive.

legnak
23rd March 2012, 3:47 AM
If needed be, could we make a second SU for the opposite team if everyone else stays dormant?

SasoriSand
24th March 2012, 12:43 AM
Just posted. I was just waiting for J-Star to finish...

And get rid of my Writer's Block

And fix my keyboard...

ENOUGH EXCUSES!!

DragonA7X
24th March 2012, 1:20 AM
Sorry I have not been on the past couple of days, school is keeping me busy plus I won't be able to access SPPF this weekend. I promise I'll post asap.

legnak
24th March 2012, 3:18 AM
Man, I have post all lined up, I just need Epic-Inferno or Jonah the Great to respond

Dr. Classy
24th March 2012, 3:26 AM
Just posted like a muthafuka.

;248;
Tyranitar, one of the only pokemon worthy to be a symbol of Germany.

Jonah the Slaking
24th March 2012, 3:49 PM
I would post but I need Epic to do so first, so I can respond to Ren.

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 7:32 PM
Okay, I'm sorry I haven't been posting. I had a very well... interesting night last night (All of you who talk to me through VMs will probably know why), so I couldn't be on. And, I only got about 3 hours of sleep, so I'm going to rest a while before posting. Sorry.

I'll go update the active/inactive list.

SasoriSand
24th March 2012, 7:35 PM
The first line makes me think of something dirty...

Anyways, if the other rockets/rebels don't post then are we going to have to open SU again?

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 7:39 PM
I can see why. Don't worry, I didn't do anything dirty like... "that." I'm still a virgin, thank you very much.

Possibly. I think we have enough active people to continue the game as of now. The only problem is that if people start becoming inactive in the later parts of the game, it will be really difficult for new people to catch up.

Jonah the Slaking
24th March 2012, 8:30 PM
Out of curiosity, about what level range would our Pokemon be at in the present time, Epic? Ours have been training all day :9

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 9:01 PM
Well, training doesn't boost your level, it just makes them better at doing their attacks.

Okay, these are the approximate levels of ours. If anyone wants to know theirs, feel free to ask.

Rafe: Level 22
Streaker: Level 20
Ren: Level 21

Astaroth: Level 21
Broadsword: Level 21
Nyx: Level 20

SasoriSand
24th March 2012, 9:06 PM
Do iget a a level boost?

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 9:14 PM
These are yours:

Aquarius: Level 21
Cell: Level 19

You haven't battled as much as Jonah and I, thus why your Pokemon are lower level.

SasoriSand
24th March 2012, 9:17 PM
Lowevered leveled? Aaqaurius is the same exact level as most of your pokes or higher and cell is only one level away. That's lower leveld?

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 9:20 PM
Well, you are "lower leveled," but not by much. That's what I meant. Plus, level doesn't make much of a difference in this game, it only decides when Pokemon will evolve or when they'll learn new moves.

SasoriSand
24th March 2012, 9:22 PM
Eh oh well...

Oh your up! Just realized XD

legnak
24th March 2012, 9:25 PM
What about mine?
Oh never mind. I have only had one battle... Doii

Jonah the Slaking
24th March 2012, 9:29 PM
What about mine?
Oh never mind. I have only had one battle... Doii

Same with Sasori's character, though. If I had to guess:

Diamonix: 21
Aron: 20
Fuyuko: 17-19

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 9:32 PM
Jonah, you're pretty close. Legnak, these are yours:

Diamonix: 21
Aron: 18
Fuyuko: 17

legnak
24th March 2012, 9:35 PM
Oh wow, all my guys still have a good way to go.

Jonah the Slaking
24th March 2012, 9:36 PM
A question, if we have to do something that is within the Pokemon's abilities but he doesn't have a move for it (i.e. Gallade has to smash a boulder but doesn't have Brick Break or Close Combat yet), are we allowed to forgo moves formally and just do a normal bodily function (punch the rock)?

Squiddly Dee
24th March 2012, 9:41 PM
Yes, you are.

Jonah the Slaking
24th March 2012, 9:47 PM
Good to know. *hopes to soon get a Dawn Stone*

Squiddly Dee
25th March 2012, 4:16 AM
Okay, I made another post from Willow's POV. This time, I wanted to give attention to her self esteem issues. How'd I do with that?

Also, CLIFFHANGER~ >: D

Dr. Classy
26th March 2012, 2:54 AM
it was good my friend.
not to shabby.

Jonah the Slaking
26th March 2012, 9:15 PM
I usually don't like things where people put themselves down because that's my job. But as far as detail and stuff goes you did well.

Squiddly Dee
26th March 2012, 11:15 PM
Well, I felt it was necessary for a certain thing that happens later.

Squiddly Dee
28th March 2012, 1:56 AM
Okay, I posted again, and I really, really want feedback on the part with Zach's dream. Yes, it is an event that actually happened when he was twelve years old. You'll find out the details later.

SasoriSand
28th March 2012, 5:40 PM
I'm just waiting for every other rocket to post -.-

Squiddly Dee
28th March 2012, 10:34 PM
Anyone willing to review my posts? No? No one?

legnak
28th March 2012, 11:26 PM
I liked it, I especially like how detetailed the dream was, by the way, what is with the overly cocky additude AnThRaX2.0?

Squiddly Dee
28th March 2012, 11:33 PM
It's how his character is, I suppose. Ahaha... :9
Thanks for the feedback.

Jonah the Slaking
29th March 2012, 9:55 PM
I hate to be blunt, and I hope Anthrax, Sasori, and/or Legnak don't take offense. But your RP posts aren't really as good as (and it really does pain me to say this) mine and (not so much this) Epic's. I think it would do you all some good to read these.

The first issue is detail. Legnak is actually pretty good about this, but Sasori and Anthrax aren't very good at it. Refer to Epic's posts, and try to duplicate that amount of detail.

The other issue is sentence structure. Legnak and Anthrax compose pretty much all of their posts with nothing but run-on sentences. I'll cite an example from one of Legnak's posts:

"Sir, I don't know how to say this but, your Kirlia may be facing a critical problem, the bullet had pierced an artery, I can try and seal it, but he'll face the risk where he won't be able to use that part of the body, if I leave it, he could suffer fatal bleeding or an infection."
It would look much better like this.

"Sir, I don't know how to say this. Your Kirlia may be facing a critical problem. The bullet pierced an artery. I can try and seal it, but he'll face the risk of not being able to use his arm again. If I leave it, he could suffer fatal bleeding or an infection."

Remember, I'm not trying to nitpick. I'm only trying to help. If you take offense, I apologize in advance.

Squiddly Dee
29th March 2012, 10:11 PM
Actually, I hate to say it, but I completely agree with Jonah. No offense, Anthrax, Legnak, and Sasori, but I think you need to work on strengthening your posts a little. If you want, you can VM/PM me for ideas on how to do so.

legnak
30th March 2012, 12:34 AM
I'm not offended at all, I completly agree. I just haven't been up to par lately due to work.

rabidepicgoose
30th March 2012, 12:38 AM
Anyone willing to review my post?

Dr. Classy
30th March 2012, 1:15 AM
OMG, I HATE YOU ALL...Naw jk, thanks for the constructive criticism, ill work on that in my next post.

SasoriSand
30th March 2012, 1:23 AM
Jonah.

1. WHY ON EARTH WOULD I BE OFFENDED?!?!?!?!?

2. I know that detail is not my strongest point...

3. I have good sentance structure?!?!? o_O

Squiddly Dee
30th March 2012, 2:07 AM
Okay, you guys, I'm going to explain the Rocket ranks and sectors because you'll absolutely need to know about sectors once you rank up.

The ranks:

Grunt: This is the absolute lowest rank. You have power over no one, and you usually do minor jobs such as guarding the bases. You will go through all types of sector procedures, in order to help you decide which sector you'll join when you rank up. Grunts are the only Rockets besides Archer who do not belong to a specific sector.

Elite Grunt: When you become an Elite Grunt you must decide which sector you want to become a part of. You will then focus on learning the basics of each sector, until you learn how to do minor jobs within your sector. You have power over Grunts and can command them, unless a higher rank member than you disapproves of the commands you give them.

Middle-Class: A middle-class member is a member who is considered to have successfully "learned the ropes" at their sector. They have power over both types of grunts.

Upper-Class: A respected member of their sector, only outranked by Admins, Leader Admins, and Archer. They have power over both types of grunts, and middle-class members.

Admin: The second most powerful of their sectors, there are only 9 admins (three per sector). When not leading, they often focus on training groups of Elite Grunts. They have power over all except for Leader Admins and Archer. If a lower ranked member disobeys their orders, they will be punished severely.

Leader Admin: The "leaders" of each sector, there are only 3 of them (one per sector), and they have power over all but Archer. Any lower ranked member who disobeys their orders will be punished extremely harshly, and may be given the death penalty under certain circumstances.

Leader: There is only one leader, and that is Archer. He is an expert at using the skills of every single sector, and because of that, he is feared by many. Anyone who disobeys him will receive the death penalty, even if it is a high-ranked officer.

The sectors:

Science and Technology: Members of the Science and Technology sector build the tools and machinery that are needed for Team Rocket. They build weapons, as well as experimental Pokemon such as hybrids, clones, and mutations in order to bring the Rockets to success. Members must have a sharp mind in order to make their creations successfully. Members of this sector usually do not battle, and stay at their base instead, but on some occasions, such as when a base is being attacked, they do fight.

Leader Admin: Kende Rirocha

Combat: Members of the Combat sector are the main force for battle. They train their Pokemon hard, and train their own bodies in order to use their weapons effectively. They fight the most often, as their name suggests, in order to get the upper hand in battles.

Leader Admin: Tion Arkada

Stealth: Members of the Stealth sector do a mix of fighting and... well, being stealthy. They must be both strong and sharp, as their fighting style combines these two attributes. They are often the main planners of the Rockets, taking time to plan both assaults and ways to defend themselves. They fight more often than the Science and Technology sector, but less often than the Combat sector.

Leader Admin: Esme Atalia

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If you have any questions about ranks/sectors, please let me know!

Dr. Classy
30th March 2012, 2:29 AM
quick question, me and legnak are battling, and we keep trying to one up each other, me a little bit more than him...(no offense just how i kinda see it, if not, sorry).
what should i do, how do you decide who wins?

Squiddly Dee
30th March 2012, 2:30 AM
Through strategy, mostly.

Also, I'm going to repost the ranks/sectors onto this page to make absolutely sure all the rockets see it:


Okay, you guys, I'm going to explain the Rocket ranks and sectors because you'll absolutely need to know about sectors once you rank up.

The ranks:

Grunt: This is the absolute lowest rank. You have power over no one, and you usually do minor jobs such as guarding the bases. You will go through all types of sector procedures, in order to help you decide which sector you'll join when you rank up. Grunts are the only Rockets besides Archer who do not belong to a specific sector.

Elite Grunt: When you become an Elite Grunt you must decide which sector you want to become a part of. You will then focus on learning the basics of each sector, until you learn how to do minor jobs within your sector. You have power over Grunts and can command them, unless a higher rank member than you disapproves of the commands you give them.

Middle-Class: A middle-class member is a member who is considered to have successfully "learned the ropes" at their sector. They have power over both types of grunts.

Upper-Class: A respected member of their sector, only outranked by Admins, Leader Admins, and Archer. They have power over both types of grunts, and middle-class members.

Admin: The second most powerful of their sectors, there are only 9 admins (three per sector). When not leading, they often focus on training groups of Elite Grunts. They have power over all except for Leader Admins and Archer. If a lower ranked member disobeys their orders, they will be punished severely.

Leader Admin: The "leaders" of each sector, there are only 3 of them (one per sector), and they have power over all but Archer. Any lower ranked member who disobeys their orders will be punished extremely harshly, and may be given the death penalty under certain circumstances.

Leader: There is only one leader, and that is Archer. He is an expert at using the skills of every single sector, and because of that, he is feared by many. Anyone who disobeys him will receive the death penalty, even if it is a high-ranked officer.

The sectors:

Science and Technology: Members of the Science and Technology sector build the tools and machinery that are needed for Team Rocket. They build weapons, as well as experimental Pokemon such as hybrids, clones, and mutations in order to bring the Rockets to success. Members must have a sharp mind in order to make their creations successfully. Members of this sector usually do not battle, and stay at their base instead, but on some occasions, such as when a base is being attacked, they do fight.

Leader Admin: Kende Rirocha

Combat: Members of the Combat sector are the main force for battle. They train their Pokemon hard, and train their own bodies in order to use their weapons effectively. They fight the most often, as their name suggests, in order to get the upper hand in battles.

Leader Admin: Tion Arkada

Stealth: Members of the Stealth sector do a mix of fighting and... well, being stealthy. They must be both strong and sharp, as their fighting style combines these two attributes. They are often the main planners of the Rockets, taking time to plan both assaults and ways to defend themselves. They fight more often than the Science and Technology sector, but less often than the Combat sector.

Leader Admin: Esme Atalia

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If you have any questions about ranks/sectors, please let me know!

SasoriSand
30th March 2012, 2:31 AM
either decide over PM/VMs or have someone else pick...

Personally, I would say PM/VM now I didn't do that with my battle since tey godmodded but in the end you should just be glad you got some experience

Dr. Classy
30th March 2012, 2:34 AM
thanks man

Squiddly Dee
30th March 2012, 2:35 AM
^ This. It helps if you decide through PM/VM. Remember to take into account factors such as the Pokemon's energy (it uses up energy when it attacks, and they can collapse from energy exhaustion like Broadsword did when he fought Ren).

rabidepicgoose
30th March 2012, 2:15 PM
Will someone review my post, please?

EDIT: Can someone review both of them, hahaha my Muse must be very happy.

Edit 2: AnThRaX2.0, please do something about your grammar/spelling (Punctuation and capitalization), legnak, you need to use more commas and don't just stick them in randomly. Just to clear things up, I'm not trying to offend either of you, I'm just trying to help, your posts are good, but a little hard to understand sometimes.

Squiddly Dee
31st March 2012, 10:34 PM
^ I agree with Rabid. You two, as Jonah and I stated before, need to do better at this. Also, you may want to try and use more description (this is more of an issue with Anthrax). You can look at my posts, Jonah's posts, or Rabid's posts as examples of posts with good detail.

By the way, Nite, I read your new post, and it's fantastic. It's very intense and suspenseful and I can't wait to see what happens next! I have taken you off the inactive list.

DragonA7X
31st March 2012, 10:37 PM
After a long wait, I finally posted. I sooo sorry for the long wait. A mix of school and other issues are hindering my progress. I am sorry for the delay but for the most part, I am back.

Could someone review my post? (Remember, I am behind with the rp)

Squiddly Dee
31st March 2012, 10:44 PM
I reviewed it already, you know... :P

DragonA7X
31st March 2012, 11:02 PM
My computer is dealing with tons of lag today and when I typed it, the comment wasn't there. But you posted before I did.
Thanks though. :D Anyone else have feedback on my new post with Peeko?

Squiddly Dee
31st March 2012, 11:05 PM
Oh, okay.

Oh my Mew, Peeko as a pirate... Ahahaha... that's simply amazing. XD Ren and Peeko must be funky accent sisters.

DragonA7X
31st March 2012, 11:25 PM
Thanks. XD Peeko has been near the sea her whole life so she has adopted a "Sailor" mouth. (She won't be cussing at all because she knows better. The one to look out for is Zacky.)

Just to let you know, Zacky is being injected with "Rare candy solution mixed with some rage bars" I already PM'd Epic about this. You will see what happens...

Jonah the Slaking
31st March 2012, 11:39 PM
Thanks. XD Peeko has been near the sea her whole life so she has adopted a "Sailor" mouth. (She won't be cussing at all because she knows better. The one to look out for is Zacky.)

Just to let you know, Zacky is being injected with "Rare candy solution mixed with some rage bars" I already PM'd Epic about this. You will see what happens...

What I see is Zacky turning evil!

I VM'd Epic about my reason for going to White Forest, and if she gives the OK, a lot of things will change with my posts. Mostly one of my Pokemon's personalities.

DragonA7X
31st March 2012, 11:56 PM
What I see is Zacky turning evil!
I VM'd Epic about my reason for going to White Forest, and if she gives the OK, a lot of things will change with my posts. Mostly one of my Pokemon's personalities.

That is part of it... What happens if you feed a pokemon a rare candy? They level up. And what happens once a pokemon levels up to a certain point???

Dr. Classy
1st April 2012, 12:36 AM
They burst into flames, and fall as ashes, jk

I'll work harder on grammar and description.

SasoriSand
1st April 2012, 1:08 AM
Just posted and now I'm wondering if my detail is better and if there is anything else I need to work on.

Squiddly Dee
1st April 2012, 1:13 AM
Sasori, your description is SO much better. I'd love it if you could keep posting as well as that. Great job.

SasoriSand
1st April 2012, 1:14 AM
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY *Happy Dance"

Ok enough of my spam... Is there anything else I need to work on?

And who would you like to win the battle, Arlyn or the Moferno?

Squiddly Dee
1st April 2012, 1:18 AM
I think Moferno should win, just because Arlyn is really low level. But, you can decide that.

HUZZAH

Jonah the Slaking
1st April 2012, 1:22 AM
Wow, the RP is very active tonight! I hope this happens again sometime soon. Anyway, I'll find my goal in the next post of mine (or the post after that).

SasoriSand
1st April 2012, 1:23 AM
I think the reason it's active is because it's saturday ,and for most people, on spring break.

Dr. Classy
1st April 2012, 1:24 AM
Hey sasori, wann battle or no. Since i am infiltrating you base.

Squiddly Dee
1st April 2012, 1:24 AM
Yeah. I'm just pretty active in general, and so are some other people, like Legnak, etc.

DragonA7X
1st April 2012, 1:28 AM
I am sadly not on spring break... :(
Also just to let you know, Zacky is going to be "killing" some weak pokemon. (as killing I mean making pokemon seriously injured and fainting)

Squiddly Dee
1st April 2012, 1:31 AM
He can kill them for real, if you want. It'll make it more realistic.

By the way, words cannot describe how much I love Peeko's accent. ALL OF MY LOVE <3

SasoriSand
1st April 2012, 1:33 AM
antharax if you DO want to battle me then your going have to wait till I beat the random guy (whos name shall be revealed later)

DragonA7X
1st April 2012, 1:44 AM
Okay. I will edit my post with the weedle and pikachu.
Thanks :3 I have an idea for Shade's accent once she is back.

Dr. Classy
1st April 2012, 1:46 AM
Alright, I'll just kill grunts while I wait.

SasoriSand
1st April 2012, 2:02 AM
Antharax that is very violent of you!

Now i kinda wanna be a rebel so I can kill someone :P

Dr. Classy
1st April 2012, 2:03 AM
lol man lol.