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Missingno. Master
6th March 2012, 5:16 AM
Rated PG for mild swearing.

First off, a warning. This fic includes many Glitch Pokémon. If you are not familiar with them, a lot of this story may not make sense to you. I strongly suggest that you all read up on Glitch Pokémon on Bulbapedia if ever you come across one in this story that is not familiar to you.

Chapter 1: A New Adventure (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14262991#post14262991)
Chapter 2: Meet Red (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14265285#post14265285)
Chapter 3: Red Vs. Violet (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14297092#post14297092)
Chapter 4: Flight Of The Z4 (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14381559#post14381559)
Chapter 5: Meet Team Debug (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14477341#post14477341)
Chapter 6: Challenge of Rewept Gym (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14587084#post14587084)
Chapter 7: Red's Rattata Run (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14620630#post14620630)
Chapter 8: Bad Day At Moon Canyon (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14718200#post14718200)
Chapter 9: Adventures in Psyduck-Sitting (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14754677#post14754677)
Chapter 10: Walter, Water, Everywhere (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14767964#post14767964)
Chapter 11: Paras's Gym Debut (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14851488#post14851488)
Chapter 12: The Trainers of Nugget Swamp (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=14895654#post14895654)
Chapter 13: Attack of the 6-Foot Weepinbell (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15025274#post15025274)
Chapter 14: Return of the Bug Catcher (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15086455#post15086455)
Chapter 15: A Meeting With Meg (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15088409#post15088409)
Chapter 16: Family Feud Reunion (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15122521#post15122521)
Chapter 17: Battle Aboard The S.S. Nean (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15281712#post15281712)
Chapter 18: Showdown in Miliovern Gym (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15287748#post15287748)
Chapter 19: A Grave Situation (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15293045#post15293045)
Chapter 20: Fatal Error (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15419504#post15419504)
Chapter 21: The Rematch With Red (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15468066#post15468066)
Chapter 22: Time To Kick Some Grass (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15540279#post15540279)
Chapter 23: Orange And Violet Go Green (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15548761#post15548761)
Chapter 24: Operation: Eevee Rescue (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15673386#post15673386)
Chapter 25: Mind Over Battle (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15809377#post15809377)
Chapter 26: Psi And Low (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15850045#post15850045)
Chapter 27: Just Say Missingno. (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15851096#post15851096)
Chapter 28: Skelefly And Snorlax (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15864209#post15864209)
Chapter 29: The Ways Of Team Error (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15867021#post15867021)
Chapter 30: Two Heads Are Better (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15875029#post15875029)
Chapter 31: Eevee's Choice (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15938412#post15938412)
Chapter 32: Second Time's The Charm (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15941458#post15941458)
Chapter 33: The Missingno. Link (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15943001#post15943001)
Chapter 34: Burn, Baby, Burn (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15943550#post15943550)
Chapter 35: There's No Place Like Home (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15945927#post15945927)
Chapter 36: The Stuff Of Legends (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15946885#post15946885)
Chapter 37: Red Vs. Orange (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15950143#post15950143)
Chapter 38: We Are The Champions (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15951078#post15951078)
Epilogue: One Month Later (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15951250#post15951250)

List of main characters and their Pokemon (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15541721#post15541721)

Pokedex entries for Glitch Pokemon (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?564423-404-Error&p=15851317#post15851317)

404 Error on Fanfiction.net (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9247960/1/404-Error)

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Chapter 1: A New Adventure
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It was a bright, sunny morning in Talpel Town. The blocky, scrambled sun shone brightly in the sky with nary a single digit to block the light as it shone onto the various dwellings, the walls of which were all covered in rocks, shrubbery, pieces of fence, and the occasional number, all of them arranged in no particular pattern, giving the whole town a very random and disorderly appearance.

Through the crooked, scrambled-looking door of one of these houses burst a young boy, fourteen years of age, dressed in baggy jeans and a black t-shirt. His shaggy, carrot-colored hair shook wildly as he ran excitedly past his mother's garden and down the road, which was peppered with tufts of grass, rocky patches, and the occasional square-shaped puddle.

"This is it!" the boy muttered to himself excitedly. "This is the day I finally get my first Poké-OOF!"

For at that moment, he had collided head-on with a girl his age, clad in a purple sweatshirt and a pair of tight blue jeans.

"Orange!" scowled the girl as she pushed her sleek black hair out of her face. "Can't you look where you're going for once in your life?"

"Sorry, Vi," the boy named Orange apologized, grinning sheepishly as the two picked themselves up and started walking together. "I'm just excited, you know? Once we get our starters from Professor Redwood, we're free to travel the Tanko region as Pokémon trainers!"

"It is exciting, isn't it?" the girl conceded, betraying a small grin. "You decided on your starter?"

Orange nodded. "44Hy for sure," he said. "What about you?"

"Still thinking about it," came the reply. "Bellsprout, Growlithe, 44Hy, they all evolve into great Pokémon."

"Well, you better get thinking, Violet- we're here," grinned Orange. Sure enough, they had arrived at a building that was coated in the same sort of semi-random debris as all the others, but was significantly larger. A sign posted on a nearby rock read; "Redwood Pokémon Research Lab".

"Rrrgh," groaned Violet as they walked up to the door. "Still... Don't... Know... Oh, Orange, can't you be patient at all?!" she added in exasperation as Orange eagerly rapped on the part of the wall which resembled a piece of fence.

"I've been patient for too long, Vi," said Orange. "I just want to be a trainer already!"

"Me too, but you can't just rush this decision!" Violet hissed.

"What rush? You've had months to think about it!" laughed Orange.

"That's just it- I've been using those months to actually think! Unlike you, you just decided you're starting with 44Hy the minute your mom told you she'd let you start training!"

Orange opened his mouth to retort, but the fence piece swung open, revealing a middle-aged man whose buttoned-up lab coat did a very poor job of hiding his considerable gut. What remained of his hair was colored a dark brown.

"Professor Redwood!" Violet exclaimed. "Um... I'm Violet Scramble, and this is-"

"Orange McPixel," finished the professor. "I've already heard from both your mothers. You're here for your starter Pokémon, correct?"

Orange and Violet nodded simultaneously.

"Well, come in! Come in!" exclaimed Professor Redwood jovially as he turned around and walked back into the building. Orange and Violet exchanged looks, then followed.

The interior of Professor Redwood's lab looked nowhere near as chaotic as the outside did; the entire floor was wood, the walls were all white, and not a single digit could be seen on the ceiling.

"Important day for you two, this," Redwood stated as he reached over to a nearby table and took three spheres off of it, scooping them into his left arm. The spheres were half red and half white, with the halves being divided by a thin, black line. At one point in this line, there was a small, white button. Each Poké Ball was the size of a baseball.

"Are those...?" Orange asked excitedly.

"Yep," replied Redwood. "The starter Pokémon. Let me introduce you to 'em. First up, the Grass-type... Bellsprout!"

As Redwood spoke that last word, he took one of the Poké Balls into his right hand and tossed it straight up into the air, whereupon it split open along that black line, releasing a gush of bright white light into the room. The light gathered on the floor and formed itself into what appeared to be a small plant of some sort. Its body was, for the most part, a brown, lithe vine, which split into two roots near the bottom. In the middle, a pair of leaves sprouted from this vine, and on the top was a bell-shaped head with two beady eyes and a large, gaping mouth.

"Bellsprout sprout," the Pokémon stated as it looked up at Orange and Violet.

"Yeah, Bellsprout, cool- let's see the next one," Orange said excitedly.

"There's no rush here, lad," replied Redwood, but all the same, he took another Poké Ball and threw it. "Next, the Fire-type... Growlithe!"

Another flash of light, and an orange quadrupedal Pokémon formed on the floor, and sat next to Bellsprout. This Pokémon had black stripes and cream-colored tufts of fur everywhere.

"Grrrrowlithe!" it barked, wagging its bushy tail at the sight of the beginning trainers.

"...and?" prompted Orange impatiently, earning a stomp on the foot from Violet.

"Sprout sprout Bellsprout!" Bellsprout laughed as Orange howled in pain.

"And finally," declared Redwood as he threw the last Poké Ball into the air, "Last but not least, the Water-type... 44Hy!"

A third flash of light, and a cube-shaped Pokémon covered in pixelly markings materialized. This Pokémon appeared to be two feet tall, and its markings were various shades of bright red, with a few black pixels thrown in.

"Four four hyyyyyyyy," squealed 44Hy, despite lacking a discernible mouth.

"Now you've met your three choices," stated Redwood. "Think it over carefully, for this decision is not one to be taken lightly-"

"I want 44hy," interrupted Orange. Violet facepalmed, Bellsprout mirroring this action.

"...OK, then," shrugged Redwood, as he held out one of the Poké Balls. "44Hy, return."

Immediately, a beam of red light shot out of the button on the Poké Ball and struck 44Hy. This converted the Water-type into a shapeless glob of red light, which was then sucked back into the ball. Redwood then tossed the sphere at Orange, who in his excitement nearly dropped it.

"And Miss Scramble, have you decided?" Redwood asked.

"I think so," smiled Violet. "I want Bellsprout."

"That was fast," remarked Orange as the professor returned Bellsprout to its Poké Ball. "I thought you couldn't decide."

"Yeah, well, I just have a feeling that me and Chompy are gonna get along fine," grinned Violet. "And don't touch that, Orange!"

"What?" Orange asked defensively, but withdrawing his hand from a nearby computer all the same. "I just wanted to see if it had Solitaire!"

"She's right, Orange, you shouldn't be touching this stuff," said Professor Redwood, as he glanced around at his laboratory. Though it was relatively clean, there were still stacks of paper in various places on the floor. The computer Orange nearly touched was hardly the only one in the room; there were at least three that Orange could see at a quick glance.

"Well, it's not like I was gonna destroy it or anything," Orange sulked. "And Vi, what did you call your Bellsprout?

"Chompy. It's Bellsprout's nickname," replied Violet. "You know, you could give that 44Hy of yours a nickname, Orange."

"I suck at nicknaming and you know it," Orange snapped. "Remember the pet Pikachu my mom got?"

"Oh yeah," Violet laughed. "You named it 'Shockey'."

"It seemed like a good idea at the time!"

"Much as I hate to interrupt," Professor Redwood spoke up, "I think I ought to give you two your Pokédexes and Poké Balls."

"Oh, yeah!" exclaimed Orange as the professor handed him a thin, red box and five miniature Poké Balls. As he handed the same to Violet, Orange dumped the supplies carelessly in the yellow backpack he had been wearing. Violet rolled her eyes as she carefully packed her supplies into the blue fanny pack she was wearing.

"Thanks, Professor," grinned Violet as the duo turned to leave.

"One more thing, just a minute," the professor said suddenly. "Get on with it."

"With what?" asked Violet. This time, it was Orange's turn to roll his eyes.

"You don't get it, do you, Vi?" he said exasperatedly. "We're both trainers now. Professor Redwood wants us to have a battle!"

"Very good, Orange," nodded Redwood approvingly. "Battles are the best way to build bonds between trainers and their Pokémon. And given how spacious my lab is, you might as well have at it right here!"

"Let's do this," grinned Orange as he and Violet went to opposite ends of the large and airy room.

"Prepare to lose," Violet grinned back. "Grass beats Water, you know."

"And Psychic beats Poison," Orange shot back. "Type advantages go both ways with this one."

"This will be a one-on-one battle between Orange McPixel of Talpel Town, and Violet Scramble, also of Talpel Town," announced Professor Redwood to nobody in particular. "Begin!"

"Alright, 44Hy!" exclaimed Orange as he took the Poké Ball off of his belt, pressed the button to enlarge it to full size, and heaved it towards the middle of the room. "Let's win this!"

The ball unleashed a flash of light which formed into 44Hy. The Water/Psychic-type floated motionlessly in midair.

"I choose you, Chompy!" called Violet as she threw her own Poké Ball. "Go!"

Another flash of light, and Violet's Bellsprout materialized. It faced Orange's 44Hy and gave what was evidently supposed to be an intimidating battle cry. Then, as if on cue, both trainers took their Pokédexes out, opened them up, and pointed them at their newly acquired Pokémon.

"44Hy, the Riverside Pokémon," droned Orange's Pokédex in a mechanical voice. "44Hy is an uncommonly good swimmer. If threatened, it fights back with telekinetic power Though usually small, the largest known specimen was recorded at being twenty-three feet tall."

"Bellsprout, the Flower Pokémon," droned Violet's Pokédex in a voice identical to Orange's Pokédex. "Bellsprout attacks with its vines at the slightest provocation. It is carnivorous and feasts on small bugs." Each Pokédex then listed on its screen the attacks the Pokémon before them knew.

"Let's go, 44Hy! Headbutt attack now!" ordered Orange.

"Hyyyyyyyyyyy," squealed 44Hy as it zoomed forward.

"Chompy, dodge it and use Vine Whip!" commanded Violet.

"Sprout!" exclaimed Chompy as it leapt into the air, evading the Headbutt completely. Then, a pair of green vines sprouted from behind Chompy's leaves and slammed into 44Hy, sending it crashing to the floor.

"44Hy, now try your Disable attack!" Orange called as the Riverside Pokémon unsteadily rose back into the air. Almost immediately, a pink glow came over 44Hy's cube-shaped body, and a similar glow formed in the Bellsprout's eyes.

"Damn!" groaned Violet. "Vine Whip was Chompy's only move, too."

"We got 'em now," grinned Orange.

"Chompy, use Struggle attack!" called Violet.

"Confusion!" cackled Orange.

"Hyyyyyyyyyyyyyy four four," exclaimed 44Hy as it launched a ray of blue light from one of its corners. Chompy dashed forward, flailing about madly, but the effort was in vain; as soon as 44Hy's Confusion attack hit, Bellsprout was knocked back; it slid across the floor, skidding to a stop at its trainer's feet.

"Chompy is unable to battle!" declared Redwood. "Orange and 44Hy are the winners!"

"We'll beat them next time, Chompy," Violet assured her unconscious Pokémon as she returned it to its Poké Ball.

"Great job, 44Hy," Orange grinned as he withdrew his Water/Psychic-type.

"Great job, the both of you," smiled Redwood. "You both were in sync with your Pokémon the whole time, and you battled excellently. I really think the two of you are gonna do fine-"

THUMP!

"What the hell?" muttered Orange; the loud thumping sound had come from just outside the front of the laboratory.

"Let's see what's going on," Redwood stated as he dashed to the door as fast as his portliness would allow. As he pushed it open, Orange looked past him to see a boy who looked around his age passed out on the road.

"Sweet crap!" exclaimed Orange as the professor ran over, picked the unconscious youth up, and carried him into the lab. He was wearing a sleeveless red jacket over a black t-shirt, and a red-and-white cap over messy brown hair.

"Is he breathing?" asked Violet as the professor laid the boy down on a nearby couch.

"Yeah he is," said Redwood. "I never seen him around here before, though."

Just then, the youth's eyelids fluttered, then opened completely.

"He's awake!" declared Orange.

"Yeah, thanks, Captain Obvious," sighed Violet.

"Oh..." groaned the boy. "Where... where am I?"

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 1.

ChaosMudkip
6th March 2012, 5:35 AM
Well, this certainly looks.....interesting. I honestly don't know what to make of this, having been to terrified of file corruption and all that to explore glitches early on, and I don't know what to expect. But, as always, I DO expect creativity and surprise from this particular author, so I have no worries. Also: Is that character outside Red?

(Btw, this arrived way ahead of schedule.)

Missingno. Master
6th March 2012, 6:02 AM
Well, this certainly looks.....interesting. I honestly don't know what to make of this, having been to terrified of file corruption and all that to explore glitches early on, and I don't know what to expect.
Really? I was a little nervous about exploring glitches myself, but curiosity got the best of me in the end. And FYI, my team in Blue Version is comprised completely of Glitch Pokémon, and I have no fewer than 20 Missingno. in my PC, and it's been like that for years, and it still plays like new. Hell, sometimes I boot up my game, encounter some Missingno. and 'M, then look at the glitched Hall of Fame for my own amusement.


But, as always, I DO expect creativity and surprise from this particular author, so I have no worries.
Heh, thanks. You flatter me.


Also: Is that character outside Red?
Is it that obvious?


(Btw, this arrived way ahead of schedule.)
Well, I said it would be up within the week, and this is within the week. I had more time on my hands today than I thought I would.

Phoopes
6th March 2012, 6:23 AM
Oh dear, it certainly has been a while since I've reviewed anything here...

What drew me in was the title of the story, 404 Error. At first I thought it was a glitch of some sort with the new upgrade of the forum, but then I saw who it was written by. Anyway, the first chapter kind of leaves you with an ominous feeling at the end, and this is amplified in my opinion because if you look at the top of page (at least on my computer), the tab says "404 Error." Sort of reminds me of a creepypasta. I also like the use of glitch Pokemon besides Missingno. I've only ever seen Missingno. in fan fiction, and none of the others have gotten used enough in my opinion. So props to you for using a lesser-known one. Your story certainly has an interesting concept, and it makes me want to read more.

However, there are two things here that could be a bit better. One is your description. The longest paragraph in this chapter only takes up three lines. While it is always good to value quality over quantity, I think you could add more to the description by spicing it up. A "tastier" description always sits better with the reader. For example, your line, "A third flash of light, and a cube-shaped Pokémon covered in pixelly reddish markings," could be fleshed out a bit more. A longer, more descriptive line here would definitely be beneficial to the story, because not everyone is familiar with glitch Pokemon like you and I are. Speaking of being familiar with glitch Pokemon, there is a bit of a problem with 44hy. It battled inside of the professor's laboratory. This normally wouldn't be a problem for a starter Pokemon, except for the fact that 44hy is over 23 feet tall... So yeah, I guess you could use author's discretion since glitch Pokemon aren't official Pokemon, but I just thought I'd point out something like that, if you want to keep the story consistent.

Overall, I loved the first chapter. You definitely have a great concept here. Keep with it!

Missingno. Master
6th March 2012, 6:43 AM
However, there are two things here that could be a bit better. One is your description. The longest paragraph in this chapter only takes up three lines. While it is always good to value quality over quantity, I think you could add more to the description by spicing it up. A "tastier" description always sits better with the reader. For example, your line, "A third flash of light, and a cube-shaped Pokémon covered in pixelly reddish markings," could be fleshed out a bit more. A longer, more descriptive line here would definitely be beneficial to the story, because not everyone is familiar with glitch Pokemon like you and I are.
You do make a good point. My description's never been my strongest point, but I'm trying to work on that.


Speaking of being familiar with glitch Pokemon, there is a bit of a problem with 44hy. It battled inside of the professor's laboratory. This normally wouldn't be a problem for a starter Pokemon, except for the fact that 44hy is over 23 feet tall... So yeah, I guess you could use author's discretion since glitch Pokemon aren't official Pokemon, but I just thought I'd point out something like that, if you want to keep the story consistent.
Yeah, I'll be taking quite a few liberties with the heights and weights of the Glitch Pokémon in this story, as a lot of them are insanely huge.


Overall, I loved the first chapter. You definitely have a great concept here. Keep with it!
Thanks, I will! Glad you liked it.

The Oncoming Storm
6th March 2012, 11:13 AM
Awesome another fiction of yours for me to devour. I really like the idea of this story. It is original and quite entertaining so far. I am one of first fans from adventure of adventurness and it looks like I'm one of the first for this fiction as well keep up the good work!

Knightfall
6th March 2012, 11:22 AM
Hello once again. I hope I can continue my streak of being on time here.

This is definately one fic that I won't be forgetting any time soon.
I looked up the list of glitched pokemon, weird as heck.
Can't wait to see what you'll do with a whole region full of them.

If this Tanko is more screwed up then the regular Kanto....Let's just say I pity any soul who has to live there.

This is a great start to what looks like a great fic, awesome work Missingno.Master.

'Til the next glitched chapteerererrre...5736;005;284///@tttrheiz

ERROR: FILE CORRUPTED: SIGN OFF NOT FOUND

Silawen
6th March 2012, 11:43 AM
You know, if I leave this story open in my tabs for too long and forget it was there, I might get a nasty shock at this random 404 error, haha. Anyway, it's been a while since I last reviewed someone, so I hope you'll excuse any silly mistakes. I do think this is an interesting concept. Glitches can have a profound influence on any game and it could mess with these characters and their lives without them even realizing it. I don't think I've seen too many of these stories either, so that's a good thing as well. The only thing I worry about is that you're going to turn this into an original trainer story which has the glitches as a byproduct, instead of making the glitches the focal point of your fic.


It was a bright, sunny morning in Talpel Town. The blocky, pixellated, scrambled sun shone brightly in the sky with nary a single digit to block the light as it shone onto the various dwellings, the walls of which were all covered in rocks, shrubbery, pieces of fence, and the occasional number.

From a technical stand point, there's nothing really wrong with this sentence. There aren't any spelling disasters, no grammar mistakes, and it flows nicely enough. Heck, I really like that you set up the way the glitches have distorted the world by pointing out the sun. However, I think your description could use some work. And I'm not just referring to what the reviewer before me said, though they have a good point.

You really like your adjectives. I know they're easy ways of describing something, but I believe you use too many of them. Just count how many you used in my quoted example. You used three just to describe the sun - and three that are very similar, thus kind of cancelling each other out - and this continues throughout the story. Try not to rely so heavily on adjectives to describe things and, if you do use them, space them out a bit. You can describe things through description, you don't have to use adjectives for everything.


Through the crooked, scrambled-looking door of one of these houses burst a young boy, fourteen years of age, dressed in baggy jeans and a black t-shirt. His unkempt, shaggy, carrot-colored hair shook wildly as he ran excitedly past his mother's garden and down the road.

This is another example where you use three of them to describe the boy's hair. That wouldn't be a problem if you did it once every few paragraphs, but you do it a lot.

Also, write out numbers under a hundred. Fourteen, not 14, or eighty-eight, not 88.

The mention of age makes me wonder about something else, too. Why is this region so different from the other regions? Why is a boy leaving on his pokémon journey at the age of fourteen instead of the customary ten? What is it about this region that would require such a thing and how does it impact everything in that region? It makes me wonder.

Random note, unrelated to that quote, but you know you're allowed to use the verb 'said', right? You don't have to use 'whispered', 'hollered', 'inquired', 'conceded' for everything. Sometimes the characters can just say things. Fandom has put this strange restriction on using 'said', but it's really not necessary.

Also, you don't have to use a speech verb for every sentence that is spoken. If two people are talking and you already set up who started talking first, then we can deduce that they alternate. So, for example:

"Hey," the boy said.

"Hey," the girl replied.

"What's going on?"

Because I started a new paragraph, we know a new person is talking. Readers are smart enough to realize that it's the boy who'd talk next.


"Bellsprout, Growlithe, 44Hy, they all evolve into great Pokémon."

I won't mention the 'to capitalize or not to capitalize' debate, as it's been discussed plenty of times, but I do want to point out something about your starter choices here. Bellsprout is a fair enough starter choice, as they are pretty east to train and have two evolutions - mind, it's still not as good as generic starters as they wouldn't require stones to evolve - and I don't know enough about 44Hy to comment on that, but the choice of growlithe seems...odd. Whoever got the growlithe would be at a distinct disadvantage. Not only is growlithe the only one without a secondary type, he only has one evolution and that evolutions requires a stone. That doesn't seem like a fair deal at all.


A third flash of light, and a cube-shaped Pokémon covered in pixelly reddish markings.

I think you're missing a verb here. Maybe add 'appeared' to the end of that sentence?


"Vine Whip was Chompy's only move, too."

Exactly. Bellsprout has one move, his opponent's starter has three. (And not just three weak ones, it has headbutt, confusion and disable.) Again, there is quite a discrepancy between starters here. Starters should always be of similar strength. They start out with scratch or tackle and a move that lowers defence or attack. At level five they get a move related to their type. This 44Hy, however, is ridiculously overpowered in comparison. I know it's a glitch pokémon, but if it was that strong it wouldn't be used as a starter. It wouldn't be fair.

General notes.

Your mechanics are fine. You don't seem to have any issues with grammar or spelling and, which is surprising for this fandom, you can even punctuate speech properly. That is awesome. I like the idea of using glitches to tell a story, even if I do have my worries about where this story is going. Overall, I think the thing you really have to focus on is description. Yes, I know you were told this before, but it deserves repeating.

Don't rely on dialogue to tell your story. Dialogue is a neat way of making things interesting and moving things along, but it shouldn't be the centre of everything. Tell the story through description, not just through characters' words. Just pause and think what's going on around them. They are in a lab, so what would they see? How about stacks of papers lined up, waiting to be read but already gathering dust? What about a beeping computer running some diagnostic? How about an empty pokéball on a table, indicating the professor is working with a pokémon. Heck, you can even have the pokémon sitting on a table when they walk in. What about aides bustling about, doing things? Using description to set up where they are is great. It also allows your characters to interact with their surroundings. Orange seems like a rash, outgoing type, so you could have him touching computers while he shouldn't and have Violet tell him off for it. Those kind of things set up their relationship and personalities.

I hope that made sense.

Anyway, I hope this review was helpful. If you have any questions, feel free to ask!

Missingno. Master
6th March 2012, 2:15 PM
Awesome another fiction of yours for me to devour. I really like the idea of this story. It is original and quite entertaining so far. I am one of first fans from adventure of adventurness and it looks like I'm one of the first for this fiction as well keep up the good work!
Thanks, I will.


This is definately one fic that I won't be forgetting any time soon.
I looked up the list of glitched pokemon, weird as heck.
Can't wait to see what you'll do with a whole region full of them.
Glad you like it so far. I've often thought Glitch Pokemon were underrepresented in fanfics, which is a shame, I feel they have potential.


If this Tanko is more screwed up then the regular Kanto....Let's just say I pity any soul who has to live there.
It is more screwed up, but not so much in the whole fourth-wall-breaking way as in The Awesome of Awesomeness, if that's what you're insinuating.


This is a great start to what looks like a great fic, awesome work Missingno.Master.
Thanks!

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I see what you did there.


You know, if I leave this story open in my tabs for too long and forget it was there, I might get a nasty shock at this random 404 error, haha. Anyway, it's been a while since I last reviewed someone, so I hope you'll excuse any silly mistakes. I do think this is an interesting concept. Glitches can have a profound influence on any game and it could mess with these characters and their lives without them even realizing it. I don't think I've seen too many of these stories either, so that's a good thing as well. The only thing I worry about is that you're going to turn this into an original trainer story which has the glitches as a byproduct, instead of making the glitches the focal point of your fic.
Well, worry not. I plan to have the Glitch Pokemon play a focal point in the story. It just won't be very evident early on.



From a technical stand point, there's nothing really wrong with this sentence. There aren't any spelling disasters, no grammar mistakes, and it flows nicely enough. Heck, I really like that you set up the way the glitches have distorted the world by pointing out the sun. However, I think your description could use some work. And I'm not just referring to what the reviewer before me said, though they have a good point.

You really like your adjectives. I know they're easy ways of describing something, but I believe you use too many of them. Just count how many you used in my quoted example. You used three just to describe the sun - and three that are very similar, thus kind of cancelling each other out - and this continues throughout the story. Try not to rely so heavily on adjectives to describe things and, if you do use them, space them out a bit. You can describe things through description, you don't have to use adjectives for everything.
True. Very true. Well, as I said I know my description needs work, though I wasn't aware that too many adjectives was a bad thing. I'll keep that in mind, thanks.


This is another example where you use three of them to describe the boy's hair. That wouldn't be a problem if you did it once every few paragraphs, but you do it a lot.
Yeah, I do, don't I?


Also, write out numbers under a hundred. Fourteen, not 14, or eighty-eight, not 88.
Gotcha. I'll edit that.


The mention of age makes me wonder about something else, too. Why is this region so different from the other regions? Why is a boy leaving on his pokémon journey at the age of fourteen instead of the customary ten? What is it about this region that would require such a thing and how does it impact everything in that region? It makes me wonder.
Trainers aren't required to start at the age of ten. Just look at the playable characters and rivals in B/W. Hell, I think the R/B instruction booklet puts Red at eleven. Anyway, there's a reason Orange and Violet are starting out so late, and it'll be explained soon enough.


Random note, unrelated to that quote, but you know you're allowed to use the verb 'said', right? You don't have to use 'whispered', 'hollered', 'inquired', 'conceded' for everything. Sometimes the characters can just say things. Fandom has put this strange restriction on using 'said', but it's really not necessary.
Another good point. I've been trying to make sure I don't overuse "said" so it doesn't start to seem repetitive. I guess I've done too good of a job of that, haven't I?


Also, you don't have to use a speech verb for every sentence that is spoken. If two people are talking and you already set up who started talking first, then we can deduce that they alternate. So, for example:

"Hey," the boy said.

"Hey," the girl replied.

"What's going on?"

Because I started a new paragraph, we know a new person is talking. Readers are smart enough to realize that it's the boy who'd talk next.
Again, I know I can do that, the thing is, I guess I've been trying too hard to not overuse that.


I won't mention the 'to capitalize or not to capitalize' debate, as it's been discussed plenty of times, but I do want to point out something about your starter choices here. Bellsprout is a fair enough starter choice, as they are pretty east to train and have two evolutions - mind, it's still not as good as generic starters as they wouldn't require stones to evolve - and I don't know enough about 44Hy to comment on that, but the choice of growlithe seems...odd. Whoever got the growlithe would be at a distinct disadvantage. Not only is growlithe the only one without a secondary type, he only has one evolution and that evolutions requires a stone. That doesn't seem like a fair deal at all.
The majority of Pokemon in Tanko are either Glitch or from Kanto, which doesn't leave too many options as far as Fire-types. Charmander's the only one that evolves that doesn't require any sort of item to do so. Also, evolution stones are a little easier to get in Tanko than in Kanto. Not by a lot, but it still makes evolving Growlithe and Weepinbell a more feasible goal.


I think you're missing a verb here. Maybe add 'appeared' to the end of that sentence?
Yeah, looking back at that sentence, it does seem like something's missing. I'll fix that.


Exactly. Bellsprout has one move, his opponent's starter has three. (And not just three weak ones, it has headbutt, confusion and disable.) Again, there is quite a discrepancy between starters here. Starters should always be of similar strength. They start out with scratch or tackle and a move that lowers defence or attack. At level five they get a move related to their type. This 44Hy, however, is ridiculously overpowered in comparison. I know it's a glitch pokémon, but if it was that strong it wouldn't be used as a starter. It wouldn't be fair.
Choosing Bellsprout as a starter would be more beneficial in the long run than anything, which actually ties in with Violet's level-headed personality, I think. That said, I hadn't actually thought about that, it just sort of worked out like that. Plus, Tanko is basically glitch Kanto, it's not gonna be quite as balanced, as you'll soon see.


Your mechanics are fine. You don't seem to have any issues with grammar or spelling and, which is surprising for this fandom, you can even punctuate speech properly. That is awesome. I like the idea of using glitches to tell a story, even if I do have my worries about where this story is going. Overall, I think the thing you really have to focus on is description. Yes, I know you were told this before, but it deserves repeating.

Don't rely on dialogue to tell your story. Dialogue is a neat way of making things interesting and moving things along, but it shouldn't be the centre of everything. Tell the story through description, not just through characters' words. Just pause and think what's going on around them. They are in a lab, so what would they see? How about stacks of papers lined up, waiting to be read but already gathering dust? What about a beeping computer running some diagnostic? How about an empty pokéball on a table, indicating the professor is working with a pokémon. Heck, you can even have the pokémon sitting on a table when they walk in. What about aides bustling about, doing things? Using description to set up where they are is great. It also allows your characters to interact with their surroundings. Orange seems like a rash, outgoing type, so you could have him touching computers while he shouldn't and have Violet tell him off for it. Those kind of things set up their relationship and personalities.
All good points. I'm trying to improve my description, and I hope it shows in the next chapter. In fact, I'm going back to edit one or two mistakes in Chapter 1, and might touch up the description there in the process.



Anyway, I hope this review was helpful. If you have any questions, feel free to ask!
Very helpful, thanks.

Silawen
6th March 2012, 3:14 PM
Trainers aren't required to start at the age of ten. Just look at the playable characters and rivals in B/W. Hell, I think the R/B instruction booklet puts Red at eleven. Anyway, there's a reason Orange and Violet are starting out so late, and it'll be explained soon enough.

That's debatable, really. Plus, you're using anime canon, not game canon. The idea that kids go to a professor to get their first pokémon and then journey around is an anime invention. In the games it's mostly the characters getting a pokémon from the professor for specific tasks - deliver this, complete the pokédex, etc. - and not because it's a custom. Which explains why there are so few players with starter pokémon in the games. So game canon shouldn't be relevant here, as it conflicts with the anime canon you're using.

In anime canon kids can get their first pokémon from the age of ten. It actually makes a pretty big deal out of Bianca being older than Ash but only just having started and she did so only because of her father's restrictions.


The majority of Pokemon in Tanko are either Glitch or from Kanto, which doesn't leave too many options as far as Fire-types. Charmander's the only one that evolves that doesn't require any sort of item to do so. Also, evolution stones are a little easier to get in Tanko than in Kanto. Not by a lot, but it still makes evolving Growlithe and Weepinbell a more feasible goal.

Then why didn't you use a charmander as the third option? It would make a lot more sense than a growlithe. Evolution stones being easier to come by still doesn't negate the fact that it creates problems, though. There's no balance to those three, their moves and their power. In fact, growlithe evolving with a stone makes it possible for one trainer to have a fully evolved arcanine within a day of getting his pokémon while the other is stuck with a bellsprout. Or, if they are poor and have no way of obtaining a fire stone, the trainer will have a growlithe for the rest of its life whilst the other has a fully evolved victreebell. Do you understand why this might be problematic?


Choosing Bellsprout as a starter would be more beneficial in the long run than anything, which actually ties in with Violet's level-headed personality, I think. That said, I hadn't actually thought about that, it just sort of worked out like that. Plus, Tanko is basically glitch Kanto, it's not gonna be quite as balanced, as you'll soon see.

Whether or not a bellsprout has potential to be great isn't relevant, though. Starters are chosen for a reason. They are easy to raise, have several evolutions, and a varied move-pool. They all start out similarly and are capable of being a trainer's only pokémon. Future strengths aren't really an issue when you're stuck with its unevolved form. A magikarp having the potential to turn into a gyarados means nothing when the trainer who owns it can only use splash when faced with a mere weedle.

I realize this is a glitch region and whatnot, but professors would always strive for balance, because that is the most fair way of dealing with these things. There is a reason why things have to be balanced and that's to give no one an advantage. If there wasn't balance then people would complain, or you'd be stuck with trainers only choosing the pokémon with the most advantage. Bellsprout and growlithe would be left behind, because choosing them would be foolish.

ESPNfanatic35
6th March 2012, 10:04 PM
I as well thought this link was legitimately an error link when I first saw it! lol. The professor's gut scene was very funny as was many of the references to glitches. It's very easy to tell that you are a big fan of Pokemon glitches! Giving credit to the lesser known 44Hy and actually have it say its own name like a regular Pokemon was great. Having a choice for a 1000+ pound glitch of pixels as your starter? Who wouldn't choose that! Keep it up!

Alexis Quinn
6th March 2012, 10:13 PM
Interesting ...
I've honestly never read a fan fic about glitch pokemons. Altough not as cute or glamorous as normal pokemons, technically they are still pokemons.
44Hy is one of my favorites alongside the classic missingno....
I've read a decent portion of your other fics during my time as a lurker. You got some talent.
I really do like that you named the kids after colors a lá pokemon adventures special ....
Looking forward to more...

Missingno. Master
6th March 2012, 11:09 PM
I as well thought this link was legitimately an error link when I first saw it! lol. The professor's gut scene was very funny as was many of the references to glitches. It's very easy to tell that you are a big fan of Pokemon glitches! Giving credit to the lesser known 44Hy and actually have it say its own name like a regular Pokemon was great. Having a choice for a 1000+ pound glitch of pixels as your starter? Who wouldn't choose that! Keep it up!
Thanks! Glad you like it so far. Oh, and fyi, in case you didn't catch it earlier, I'm taking a few liberties with the height and weight of the Glitch Pokémon. A lot of them exceed ten feet in height and half a ton in weight.


Interesting ...
I've honestly never read a fan fic about glitch pokemons. Altough not as cute or glamorous as normal pokemons, technically they are still pokemons.
44Hy is one of my favorites alongside the classic missingno....
I've read a decent portion of your other fics during my time as a lurker. You got some talent.
I really do like that you named the kids after colors a lá pokemon adventures special ....
Looking forward to more...

Thanks! Though Orange's 44Hy will evolve at some point, so don't get too attached to it in that form. And you'll be pleased to know that there will be at least two different forms of Missingno. appearing in this story at some point.

And now, the part of the post that will appeal to you the most. As it happens, I was motivated to write shortly after posting the first chapter, so I went on and wrote up Chapter 2. I'd have posted it earlier, only I had school, and I had to proofread it still. But, now, here it is, Chapter 2!


Chapter 2: Meet Red
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"Where am I?" the boy asked again.

"Take it easy, son," said Professor Redwood quietly. "You're in my lab, in Talpel Town."

"...what?" the youth asked uncertainly. "Talpel Town? Where... Who are you?"

"I'm Professor Redwood."

"Who?"

"You've never heard of Professor Redwood?" asked Orange incredulously. "He's like, only the most renowned Pokémon researcher in the whole Tanko region!"

"The what region?" replied the boy.

"What the hell?!" exclaimed Orange. "HOW do you not know the name of the region you're in?!?!"

"Orange, shut up," sighed Violet. She then turned to the youth on the professor's couch. "I'm Violet Scramble and Mr. Insensitivity back there is Orange McPixel. What's your name?"

"Red. Red Vershunn," replied the boy.

"And where are you from, Red?" asked Redwood patiently.

"Pallet Town, Kanto region," Red answered.

Orange, Violet, and Professor Redwood exchanged surprised glances.

"The WHAT?!" exclaimed Orange.

"The... Kanto region," Red repeated, now regarding Orange warily. "You must have heard of it."

"I've heard of it," nodded Orange. "But I thought it was just an urban legend, you know, how it's supposed to be like a parallel universe or something."

"Kanto does indeed exist," said Professor Redwood. "They've been conducting all sorts of research in the laboratory on Bincanar Island in the south, and the scientists there believe that it may be possible to forge a link between Kanto and Tanko. Red, what's the last thing you remember before waking up on my sofa?"

"Well," Red began, "I was in Fuchsia City's Safari Zone, with Professor Oak and his grandson Blue."

"Professor Oak exists?!?!" interrupted Orange.

"Orange?" said Violet.

"Yes?"

"Shut up."

"Anyway," continued Red, "He was going there to study some of the rarer Pokémon in the wild, and I got him to bring me along. He had just given me my first Pokémon, and I thought maybe I'd be able to catch something else there. But once I was inside, I got separated from the professor and Blue, and while trying to find them, somehow angered a Venonat, who blasted me with Sleep Powder. Once I woke up, I couldn't find the professor or Blue anywhere, so I left the Safari Zone. Five minutes later, I heard this awful voice in my head, saying stuff like 'Time's up! Your Safari Game is done!', over and over. It got worse and worse, and I must have passed out after that, 'cause that's the last thing I remember."

A stunned silence followed this story. After a few minutes, Professor Redwood cleared his throat, breaking the silence.

"Well, Red, you've obviously had a tough time. I think the best thing for you would be to get to Bincanar Island in the south. The scientists there might just have the answers you're looking for. Unfortunately, there's no boat scheduled to leave for Bincanar for a few months now..."

"Oh, man," groaned Red. "The professor's probably worried sick."

"I've got it!" exclaimed Redwood suddenly. "Red, you're a trainer, right?"

"Yeah," Red nodded. "I never got a Pokédex yet, though. Professor Oak was all out, but he expecting to get a shipment of Pokédexes once we got back from Fuchsia, so he'd give me one then."

"Well, I have an extra one," Redwood stated as he rummaged through a nearby cabinet, tossing various items over his shoulders as he spoke; Orange had to duck to avoid being hit by a stray cheese grater. Finally, the pudgy professor pulled a Pokédex out and handed it to Red. "Here you go. Orange and Violet here are about to start their own Pokémon journey. You can join them, Red. They'll probably be going to Bincanar Island for a badge eventually, and you can get your answers then."

"Um, Professor? We weren't actually gonna travel together," Orange spoke up. "We just kinda bumped into each other on the way here."

"And he means that in the most literal way possible," Violet added, rubbing the spot on her head where it had collided with Orange's head.

"Really?" Redwood asked in surprise. "I would have thought you'd be traveling together, especially in these dangerous times."

"They're not dangerous anymore, Professor," Orange said. "Those gangs haven't been heard from in months."

"True," replied Redwood, "but that doesn't mean they're gone. And anyways, don't you think you ought to help Red out here? He's in a land unfamiliar to him."

"We'd be glad to," Violet stated while shooting a dirty look at Orange.

"Good, good," nodded Redwood. "Now, Red, what do you say?"

"Well..." began Red, uncertainly, "...I don't know. It seems like a really roundabout way to get there. I mean, there's no other way I can get to... what was it... Bincanar Island? No planes? I can't rent a boat? You don't have any Water-types I can borrow?"

Redwood shook his head. "The ferry service to Bincanar put all the boat rental businesses out of work, and they had already been struggling given the popularity of traveling over water via Pokémon. The only Pokémon I have here are the starters I give to beginning trainers, and the Water-types don't know Surf yet."

"You don't have the HM for Surf?" asked Red.

"Sorry," said Redwood. "Hidden Machines are very hard to come by, even for a professor such as myself. The only one I have teaches Flash, and that's practically useless."

"Well, in that case," Red said, "I guess I'll go with... Violet and Orange, right?"

"I think that's the best idea," nodded Redwood. "Even if you have questions about this region, I'm sure exploring it and seeing it for yourself would be better than any answer I can give you."

"Good point," Red admitted. "Professor Oak says stuff like that all the time, that it's better to see the world for myself than just learn about it from someone else. That's why he agreed to take me with him to the Safari Zone in the first place."

"That's settled then!" boomed Redwood. "Good luck to the three of you!"

The trio said their goodbyes and exited Redwood's lab. Almost immediately, Red's eyes widened and he started to look in every direction, clearly weirded out.

"What the..." Red muttered. "The sun... It looks like someone cut it into ribbons and scrambled up the pieces!"

"Nice, isn't it?" smiled Violet. "You don't usually get a clear day like this in Tanko.

"And... are those numbers in that garden?!"

"Those?" Orange scoffed, looking at the professor's garden, which contained a bunch of ones, threes, and nines, all of them looking as if they were carved out of wood and painted black. "Those are nothing. My mom's crop of even numbers is fantastic this year."

"This place is too weird," Red muttered, shaking his head. "So... you two are trainers, right?"

"Yeah," answered Violet. "You want to see our Pokémon?"

"Sure," Red replied, finally smiling. Violet smiled back as she took out and enlarged a Poké Ball.

"Come on out, Chompy!" called Violet as she threw the sphere into the air. The Poké Ball split open, and Violet's Bellsprout materialized. Though obviously worn out from its previous battle, it was at least conscious again.

"Cool Bellsprout," Red nodded as he took a Poké Ball of his own off his belt. "Now have a look at my Pokémon! Charmander, go!"

Red threw the Poké Ball, and in a flash of light, a small, orange, reptilian Pokémon appeared before them. It stood on its hind legs, and the cream colored spot on its stomach extended down the length of its tail, which was tipped with a single small ember.

"WOAH!" exclaimed Orange. "A Charmander?! Those are so rare!" As he spoke, he took out his Pokédex and pointed it at Charmander.

"Charmander, the Lizard Pokémon. Obviously prefers hot places. When it rains, steam pours from the tip of its tail."

"Yep," Red grinned proudly. "Professor Oak gave me this Charmander as my starter Pokémon. Now let's see your Pokémon, Orange."

"With pleasure," Orange grinned back as he took his own Poké Ball, pressed the button to enlarge it, and tossed it up. In yet another flash of light, the two-foot-tall cube known as 44Hy appeared.

"AIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEEE!" shrieked Red in an unnaturally high voice as he pointed at 44Hy. "Wha... What IS that thing?!"

"My 44Hy," answered Orange. "Why, what's wrong?"

"Four four?" added 44Hy.

"Where do I begin?!" Red exclaimed, now looking slightly nauseated. "Is that... thing... even a Pokémon?"

"Look it up on your Pokédex," suggested Violet. Obligingly, Red took the miniature computerized Pokémon encyclopedia out of his backpack and aimed it at 44Hy.

"44Hy, the Riverside Pokémon. 44Hy is an uncommonly good swimmer. If threatened, it fights back with telekinetic power," droned Red's Pokédex.

"OK..." Red stated. "But, all the same, call it back, would you? That thing gives me the creeps."

"44Hy is not a 'thing'," scowled Orange, but he withdrew his Pokémon all the same.

"Thank you," Red sighed in relief. "So, um... where are we off to first?"

"Nearest Pokémon Gym ought to be in Ivadirin City," Violet answered as she and Red withdrew their Pokémon. "It's not far from here, it shouldn't take too long to get through Route -1."

"Route negative one?" Red repeated.

"What, now you're gonna have a problem with our routes?" demanded Orange.

"Not a problem," said Red, shaking his head. "Just... I just need to get used to this place."

"We understand," Violet nodded. She then turned and glared at Orange while mouthing "You are so insensitive!".
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Before long, the trio had arrived at Route -1. Red looked all around him, eyes wide, jaw dropped. The trees that surrounded them looked crooked and scrambled, as if someone had taken ordinary oak trees, chopped them into pieces, and glued them back together haphazardly and without regard for what trees actually looked like; between the arboreal abominations were what appeared to be large rocks with pieces of drywall, brick, and roof tiles attached in strange places.

"Here we are," said Violet. "Route -1. Let's see what we can find in the way of wild Pokémon here."

"Oh, it's on!" exclaimed Orange. "I bet I catch something before either one of you!"

"Is he always like this?" Red muttered to Violet. as Orange dashed off across the scrambled landscape.

"You've no idea," she answered.

With that said, the three trainers began wandering around, turning their heads to look in every direction, eyes peeled for the slightest sign of a wild Pokémon. Though they saw nothing for the first minute of their search, a high-pitched gibbering sound reached their ears before long. Simultaneously the looked in the direction from which the noise was coming, and found its source easily enough; a swarm of small purple Pokémon was zipping through the air above them. Each Pokémon couldn't have been much taller than ten inches; their bodies looked almost rectangular, but with uneven, almost jagged bottoms. As they flew in every directions, some of them emitted small explosions, usually two or three in quick succession. Oddly, not only did the explosions not seem to harm the others, they didn't even seem to harm the exploders.

"Awesome!" Orange exclaimed as he held his Pokédex up at the noisy newcomers. "It's a whole swarm of .4!"

".4, the Caffeine Pokémon," droned Orange's Pokédex. ".4 travel in swarms and emit high-pitched cries constantly. They explode regularly to let off excess energy, but the explosions will not knock them out. .4's type is Pokémaniac, which gives it no weaknesses."

"Gah!" exclaimed Red as a couple of .4 swooped down right past his face. "Get rid of these things!"

"Get rid of them?" repeated Orange. "Are you kidding? I'm gonna catch one!" And he took the Poké Ball of his belt, enlarged it, and threw it. "44Hy, come on out!" he exclaimed.

The ball opened up, and 44Hy appeared in a brilliant display of light. Many of the .4 scattered in all directions at the sight of this larger Pokémon, though several remained.

"Use Confusion!" Orange commanded.

"Four four!" replied 44Hy as it fired off a ray of blue light at the remaining .4. The Caffeine Pokémon screeched in pain as the Psychic move struck them, causing a few more to flee. One of them, however, stayed behind and began to fly in circles around 44Hy.

"This is too weird," Red murmured, shaking his head.

".4's using its Agility attack," Violet warned Orange. "You better be careful, now it's even faster!"

"Relax," scoffed Orange. "I got this-"

BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!

Orange, however, was interrupted by the sound of three consecutive explosions, all of them coming from .4. Each blast, though minor, knocked 44Hy back a bit.

"So, what, they know Explosion? Selfdestruct?" asked Red.

"Nope. TM28," said Violet.

"TM twenty-eight?" Red repeated. "I don't think I'll ever get used to this."

"TM28, .4's signature attack," Red's Pokédex spoke up suddenly from within his backpack. Red hastily dug it out to hear it continue. ".4 explodes to let off excess energy. Due to its constantly-energetic nature, however, the blast does not knock it out. TM28 has no type."

"A move... with no type," Red sighed. "I've never heard of such a thing."

Meanwhile, Orange was continuing to battle the wild .4. After the TM28 attack was done, 44Hy had retaliated with a Headbutt, slamming the energetic Pokémon down onto a rocky part of the ground, right next to a square-shaped puddle. Though it still made unintelligible gibbering noises, it couldn't seem to rise back into the air.

"I've been waiting to say this all my life," Orange said as he took an empty Poké Ball out of his backpack, enlarged it, and heaved it directly at the unconscious .4. "Poké Ball! GO!!!"

The red-and-white sphere hurtled through the air and struck the Caffeine Pokémon. As soon as this happened, .4's body turned into a shapeless glob of transparent red energy. The Poké Ball split open, and with a distinct whirring sound, sucked the mass of energy inside. Once all of it was inside, the ball snapped shut and began to wobble back and forth on the ground.

"C'mon.... c'mon," whined Orange as the ball continued to shake.

Finally, after what seemed like an eternity, the ball stopped shaking.

"YES! YEEEAAAAH!" exclaimed Orange as he snatched the Poké Ball and held it up high. "I caught .4! Oh yeah!"

As Orange continued to loudly celebrate his new capture, Violet turned to Red.

"So, Red, why don't you try to catch a Pokémon? It shouldn't be too hard to find some more .4."

"I'll pass, thanks," Red answered. "I haven't even heard of Pokémon like 44Hy and .4 before. They just creep me out a bit, I dunno. I prefer stuff like.. you know... Rattata, Pikachu, Spearow. Stuff with bodies that aren't so... geometric."

"Well, you'll be able to find a good amount of those," Violet assured him. Then, she looked behind Red. "Huh. Speaking of which, isn't that a Rattata right there?"

Red spun around. Sure enough, a small, rodentlike creature was scurrying across the blocky landscape. Most of its fur was a rich shade of purple, and its front teeth were extremely prominent.

"Now we're talking!" Red exclaimed as he held out his Pokédex in the direction of the Rattata.

"Rattata, the Rat Pokémon," said Red's Pokédex. "Rattata's front teeth grow continually, so it gnaws various items to whittle them down. It can chew through even the toughest of metals."

"I'm catching this!" Red declared, throwing a Poké Ball. "Charmander, go!"

In a flash of light, Charmander appeared. It gave a sharp cry of "Char char!", which caught the Rattata's attention.

"Orange, will you shut up for a minute?" Violet asked; Orange had still been celebrating his new Pokémon in a very verbal manner. At this, Orange grudgingly quieted down, then noticed Red about to battle.

Rattata made the first move. It darted forward, and slammed its whole body into Charmander. Though Charmander was taller than Rattata, the Tackle attack made its mark nonetheless; Charmander was pushed backwards a bit, but it managed to stand its ground.

"Scratch attack, Charmander!" Red ordered.

"Charmander char!" replied Charmander as it lunged at Rattata and took a swipe at it with its front left leg. This knocked Rattata onto its back, but it got back up relatively easily. Rattata then wheeled around and started wagging its tail uselessly.

"...uh..." Orange said, clearly at a loss.

"It's Rattata's Tail Whip," explained Violet. "Red, don't get caught off-guard. That's exactly what Rattata is after."

"Right," nodded Red. "Charmander, Scratch one more time!"

"Chaaaaar!" Charmander exclaimed as it lunged at Rattata again and took another swipe. This time, Rattata was able to scramble out of the way of the attack. It continued to run, gathering speed, and slammed into Charmander's side, sending the Lizard Pokémon tumbling to the ground.

"Gah!" Red exclaimed. "That was a Quick Attack, wasn't it?"

"Looked like one," Orange nodded. "My mom's pet Pikachu knows that move."

"Charmander, try your Ember attack!" Red ordered.

"Mander!" Charmander exclaimed as it climbed to its feet. Charmander then turned its back to Rattata and wagged its tail. With each wag, a number of small flames flew off its tail. Rattata watched this, seemingly mesmerized by the fire, until the flames actually collided with it. At that point, Rattata began screeching angrily, but passed out almost immediately.

Red wasted no time. With his right hand, he dug into his backpack and pulled out an empty Poké Ball. With his left hand, he turned the cap on his head so it faced backwards. He enlarged the Poké Ball, then launched it at the Rattata. "Poké Ball, go!" Red shouted.

The sphere struck Rattata, and just as Orange's Poké Ball had done with .4, Rattata turned into a shapeless mass of red energy, which was sucked into the ball. Once Rattata was completely pulled inside, the ball slammed shut, fell to the ground, and started wobbling back and forth.

There was total silence. Red was glaring at the Poké Ball as though his gaze would prevent Rattata from breaking free. Then, finally, the ball gave a final pinging sound and fell still.

"Nice," Orange said as Red scooped up the Poké Ball containing his new Rattata.

"Yeah," Red grinned back as he withdrew Charmander. "I caught Rattata!"

"Your turn, Violet!" Orange exclaimed as Red turned his cap back around. "You're the only one who hasn't caught a Pokémon yet."

"Will you give it a rest?" Violet snapped. "I'll catch a Pokémon when I'm good and ready to, and not just because it's the first one I see!"

"Well, you gotta do something, that Bellsprout of yours isn't gonna cut it forever."

"I will, eventually. Quit bugging me."

"Fine," Orange sighed as Violet started looking around. Once she had her back to him, however, Orange stuck his tongue out at her.

"Shouldn't we head to... what was it... Irividan City?" Red suggested.

"It's Ivadirin City," said Violet. "And you got a good point.

"Wait a minute!" interrupted Orange. "You wanna challenge the Ivadirin Gym Leader with only a Bellsprout that only knows Vine Whip?"

"That's... actually a good point," Violet admitted. "Even if I don't want to catch something just yet, I gotta train Bellsprout a bit."

"In which case we should head to a Pokémon Center," Red stated. "Bellsprout looked pretty wiped out when you showed it to me."

"Oh, fine," sighed Orange. With that, the trio continued down Route -1.

The walk wasn't a particularly long one. Red was extremely wary of his surroundings, given that the ground seemed to be made up of lush grass, solid rock, paved road, and puddles of water in relatively equal measure. Orange and Violet traversed this terrain like it was nothing, whereas Red kept tripping over almost everything. It took Red a little while, but he was able to catch up. Once he did, he began talking with Orange and Violet, and was astonished to discover that the both of them were fourteen.

"I'm only eleven!" exclaimed Red. "And you guys only just started today?"

"Yeah," sighed Orange. "There's been a lot of trouble in this region lately, so my mom didn't want me starting until things quieted down a bit."

"Same with my mom," added Violet. "There's been these two gangs wreaking havoc all over the region, causing trouble for trainers. I think they call themselves Team Debug and Team Error. My mom only gave up and let me start my journey because they've quieted down lately."

"Yeah, same here," Orange nodded.

"Teams Debug and Error, huh?" said Red. "They sound a lot like this Team Rocket we got back in Kanto. They're a gang of Pokémon thieves."

At that point, however, the trio reached the top of a small hill and saw before them a mass of pixellated, scrambled structures that appeared to be buildings.

"Here we are," announced Orange. "Ivadirin City!"

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 2.

ChaosMudkip
6th March 2012, 11:47 PM
Red Vershunn? Someone is having a bit of fun with homophones, Action Replay style!
Overall, it will be hard to get used to glitch Pokemon. I've always liked the concept, yet, as aforementioned, shied away from them. In any case, I wonder why Red hasn't figured out the anagrams of the cities. Overall, the fic seems like it has potential, but I doubt its ability to last a considerable amount of time.

GroundBlaze
7th March 2012, 12:10 AM
Pant.....pant....... just learned about this fic an hour ago and I must say I'm impressed
not only am I learning about new glitch pokemon but you've actually taken a concept most trainers fear and made it funny
add me to the PM list please so I can read on
as always good work m.m

Knightfall
7th March 2012, 2:12 AM
FILE: LOCATED.....47564/REBOOT.

LOADING CHAPTER RESPONCE.....

Wow, two chapters in a day. Well played.

Anyways, this chapter had a lot more going on in it.
Inter-dimensional transport,
me having to look up more glitched Pokemon,
Red Vershunn (nice last name), more mixed up names for towns,
and first captures for Orange and Red. (And I thought 44HY was a weird Pokemon, .4 is just a dot.)

And I noticed something, isn't Ivadirin city's gym leader the eighth gym leader? Or is that just a difference between Tanko and Kanto.

Anyways loving this so far, great work.

Knightfall signing off...;005;


EDIT: May I please be put on the PM list, if there is one? Thanks.

The Oncoming Storm
7th March 2012, 10:25 AM
So chapter two finally allows us to see the strange and crazy areas of the tanko region. Wow is it weird. I am with red on this one. I much prefer theregular routes and plain pokemon. Don't get me wrong I love the fic I just wouldn't want to live in this region at all.

I can't wait to see what the gym leader will be like

Shale
7th March 2012, 11:26 AM
Original idea! A whole region based off of glitch Pokémon is pretty ridiculous. I could get used to it, I think.

Wait, so .4's signature move is the TM28 or is that the name of the move?

Anyways, please add me to the PM list!

-Shale

Silawen
7th March 2012, 3:04 PM
Chapter two.

This chapter is fine, mechanically. Again, not many grammar mistakes, nor spelling errors, but I'm still missing something. It's description. We discussed it before, but it's still important and I haven't seen much improvement. Just take a look at your chapter and check out how many paragraphs begin with - or consist solely of - dialogue. It's almost entirely made up of speech. You do everything through your character's words instead of your own.

I really think working on description could flesh out and improve your story. As it stands, you're missing out. Why? You're working in a world so unlike the ones we're used to, but you're not using it. You could show it to us, much like you did the sun, but you glance over it. Them living in a glitched out universe is new, it's unexpected, and it's something Red would not be accustomed to. Neither are we. So show it to us.

You do it a little bit with the sun in chapter one and some quick description of the forest and its glitched-out pokémon, but you should try to do it more. This world being different from others is a vital plot-point, so show us how different it is. Does this make sense? (And don't just say things are 'scrambled'. Explain what that looks like.)

Also, why hasn't Red realized that it's a mirror world yet? He should be intimately aware of Pallet Town and the road that leads to Viridian City. Your version is supposed to be a glitched out version of theirs, right? So while things would be different, they would still be similar. So why hasn't he taken note of it yet? And why is he being sent on a trainer's journey when he needs to get to Cinnibar Island - or this world's version of it, anyway. Surely there are more boats that could take him, or they could rent one, or Redwood could lend him a water pokémon, or ask someone to fly him there, or... Someone from an alternate universe just showed up on a professors doorstep. I doubt someone so interested in knowledge would simply say 'oh, go journey around the world for a few months and maybe you'll get to this faraway island at some point'.

Anyway, I still think this has an interesting premise, but it's starting to look like a trainer journey that just happens to be in a world that has lots of glitches. I hope you have some sort of plot in mind, because that would get boring pretty fast. Also, description, but you know that by now.

Your characters are fun, though a bit cliché - the loudmouth boy, the know-it-all girl and the cool stranger - but they work well and their dialogue sounds realistic. I do like their interaction, even if I think Red adjusts to this being a new world a bit too easily. (I certainly wouldn't be happy catching pokémon shortly after I'd been told I was in an alternate universe.) They are lovely, though, and that's good. Good luck with the next chapter and any edits you might make!

Edit. Oh, I forgot. One error I did notice was in this paragraph:


".4, the Caffeine Pokémon," droned Orange's Pokédex. ".4 travel in swarms and emit high-pitched cries constantly. They explode regularly to let off excess energy, but the explosions will not knock them out. 44Hy's type is Pokémaniac, which gives it no weaknesses."

Or, at least I think it's an error. That last 44Hy doesn't make sense to me, as the pokédex is talking about the .4 pokémon, not the starter.

Osha Say What?
7th March 2012, 5:29 PM
I like the story so far. It's pretty interesting. I can't wait to see what kind of antics these guys get into. Put me on the PM list please.

Metal Bagon
7th March 2012, 5:46 PM
I've only read chapter one but this looks great! Could I please be added to the PM list?

Sound
7th March 2012, 8:32 PM
First off: Wonderful idea for a story, and wonderful execution.

Second off: It'll take a little getting used to to read this while checking bulbapedia every chapter. Not that big of a deal, since I rarely find much else about the glitchmons from there.

Third off: 402 ERROR PLEASE RELOAD THE WEBPAGE. Sorry, couldn't resist.

Fourth: The only problem is that, after reading The Adventure of Adventureness for so long, it's slightly predictable. Or, maybe I've just read so many jokes from you that, while I don't expect them, I'm not surprised when they rear their head. Could another poster give me a second opinion?

Finally: Despite that, could you add me to the PM list?

GroundBlaze
8th March 2012, 1:36 AM
Fourth: The only problem is that, after reading The Adventure of Adventureness for so long, it's slightly predictable. Or, maybe I've just read so many jokes from you that, while I don't expect them, I'm not surprised when they rear their head. Could another poster give me a second opinion?

Finally: Despite that, could you add me to the PM list?

I agree to the fact that it could get predictable but in a way this could be postive

consider it like going to the book store and getting a new series by your favorite author: you don't come soley based on the plot but on the great experience you have with said writer
The result is a craving for a new trick to seperate this work as an individual in its own right but not lose the admirable sense of style that connected you to the story initally.

Missingno. Master
8th March 2012, 1:40 AM
Red Vershunn? Someone is having a bit of fun with homophones, Action Replay style!
Couldn't resist. :)


In any case, I wonder why Red hasn't figured out the anagrams of the cities.
He will, and soon. Right now he's still trying to work through the whole... everything else.


Pant.....pant....... just learned about this fic an hour ago and I must say I'm impressed
not only am I learning about new glitch pokemon but you've actually taken a concept most trainers fear and made it funny
add me to the PM list please so I can read on
as always good work m.m
Thanks! Glad you like it, and you are added to the PM list!


Anyways, this chapter had a lot more going on in it.
Inter-dimensional transport,
me having to look up more glitched Pokemon,
Red Vershunn (nice last name), more mixed up names for towns,
and first captures for Orange and Red. (And I thought 44HY was a weird Pokemon, .4 is just a dot.)
I like .4. Glad you liked the chapter.


And I noticed something, isn't Ivadirin city's gym leader the eighth gym leader? Or is that just a difference between Tanko and Kanto.
The Ivadirin Gym Leader will be the eighth Gym Leader. The gang just doesn't know that yet. All Orange and Violet know is that there's a Pokémon Gym in Ivadirin City.


Anyways loving this so far, great work.

Knightfall signing off...;005;
Thanks!


EDIT: May I please be put on the PM list, if there is one? Thanks.
Sure thing!


So chapter two finally allows us to see the strange and crazy areas of the tanko region. Wow is it weird. I am with red on this one. I much prefer theregular routes and plain pokemon. Don't get me wrong I love the fic I just wouldn't want to live in this region at all.
I see your point, yeah. Even I would be a little wary of living in a place like that, and I'm really into glitches.


I can't wait to see what the gym leader will be like
As mentioned above, you'll have a bit of a wait for that.


Original idea! A whole region based off of glitch Pokémon is pretty ridiculous. I could get used to it, I think.
Thank you!


Wait, so .4's signature move is the TM28 or is that the name of the move?
TM28 is the name of .4's signature move.


Anyways, please add me to the PM list!
Not a problem. Glad you like it so far!


Chapter two.

This chapter is fine, mechanically. Again, not many grammar mistakes, nor spelling errors, but I'm still missing something. It's description. We discussed it before, but it's still important and I haven't seen much improvement. Just take a look at your chapter and check out how many paragraphs begin with - or consist solely of - dialogue. It's almost entirely made up of speech. You do everything through your character's words instead of your own.

I really think working on description could flesh out and improve your story. As it stands, you're missing out. Why? You're working in a world so unlike the ones we're used to, but you're not using it. You could show it to us, much like you did the sun, but you glance over it. Them living in a glitched out universe is new, it's unexpected, and it's something Red would not be accustomed to. Neither are we. So show it to us.

You do it a little bit with the sun in chapter one and some quick description of the forest and its glitched-out pokémon, but you should try to do it more. This world being different from others is a vital plot-point, so show us how different it is. Does this make sense? (And don't just say things are 'scrambled'. Explain what that looks like.)
You're right, I know. I'm really gonna try and work on my description in Chapter 3. It's never been my strongest point, and I'm aware I need to work on it.


Also, why hasn't Red realized that it's a mirror world yet? He should be intimately aware of Pallet Town and the road that leads to Viridian City. Your version is supposed to be a glitched out version of theirs, right? So while things would be different, they would still be similar. So why hasn't he taken note of it yet? And why is he being sent on a trainer's journey when he needs to get to Cinnibar Island - or this world's version of it, anyway. Surely there are more boats that could take him, or they could rent one, or Redwood could lend him a water pokémon, or ask someone to fly him there, or... Someone from an alternate universe just showed up on a professors doorstep. I doubt someone so interested in knowledge would simply say 'oh, go journey around the world for a few months and maybe you'll get to this faraway island at some point'.
As I said earlier, Red will realize that Tanko is a glitchy version of Kanto, and very soon, too. Once he starts to work past the fact that he's in an alternate dimension where everything is all glitchy and people grow numbers in their gardens, anyway.

As for why Redwood didn't try any other methods of getting Red to Bincanar Island, he has his own reason for wanting Red to travel around Tanko, which will be detailed later in the story.


Anyway, I still think this has an interesting premise, but it's starting to look like a trainer journey that just happens to be in a world that has lots of glitches. I hope you have some sort of plot in mind, because that would get boring pretty fast. Also, description, but you know that by now.
I do have a plot in mind. If you'll recall, the two evil teams mentioned in the story- Team Debug and Team Error, they'll be playing a rather major role in the story and will have much influence on the plot.


Your characters are fun, though a bit cliché - the loudmouth boy, the know-it-all girl and the cool stranger - but they work well and their dialogue sounds realistic. I do like their interaction, even if I think Red adjusts to this being a new world a bit too easily. (I certainly wouldn't be happy catching pokémon shortly after I'd been told I was in an alternate universe.) They are lovely, though, and that's good. Good luck with the next chapter and any edits you might make!
Well, I'm glad you liked it. Thanks.


Edit. Oh, I forgot. One error I did notice was in this paragraph:



Or, at least I think it's an error. That last 44Hy doesn't make sense to me, as the pokédex is talking about the .4 pokémon, not the starter.
That was indeed an error, that instance of "44Hy" was supposed to say ".4". I've fixed it, thanks for pointing it out.


I like the story so far. It's pretty interesting. I can't wait to see what kind of antics these guys get into. Put me on the PM list please.
Sure thing, and thanks!


I've only read chapter one but this looks great! Could I please be added to the PM list?
You're on the list. Glad you're liking it!


First off: Wonderful idea for a story, and wonderful execution.

Second off: It'll take a little getting used to to read this while checking bulbapedia every chapter. Not that big of a deal, since I rarely find much else about the glitchmons from there.

Third off: 402 ERROR PLEASE RELOAD THE WEBPAGE. Sorry, couldn't resist.

Fourth: The only problem is that, after reading The Adventure of Adventureness for so long, it's slightly predictable. Or, maybe I've just read so many jokes from you that, while I don't expect them, I'm not surprised when they rear their head. Could another poster give me a second opinion?

Finally: Despite that, could you add me to the PM list?

First off: Thank you!

Second off: I'll give you a bit of a heads-up in that case; next one you might want to read about is Q.

Third off: Don't blame you. :)

Fourth: Never thought of it like that. Then again, this story is gonna be more plot focused than The Adventure of Adventureness, and the jokes will be less prominent.

Finally: Consider yourself added.

The Oncoming Storm
8th March 2012, 11:32 AM
May i be added to the pm list as well? I would hate to miss the new chapters.

Silawen
8th March 2012, 1:26 PM
As I said earlier, Red will realize that Tanko is a glitchy version of Kanto, and very soon, too. Once he starts to work past the fact that he's in an alternate dimension where everything is all glitchy and people grow numbers in their gardens, anyway.

He seems to have accepted everything already, though, what with him catching a pokémon and whatnot. If I'd been him I'd still be at the professor's, asking questions and staring in fear at all these strange, alien concepts. I certainly wouldn't leave the one person who's most likely to have immediate answers - a pokémon professor. But that might just be me.


As for why Redwood didn't try any other methods of getting Red to Bincanar Island, he has his own reason for wanting Red to travel around Tanko, which will be detailed later in the story.

Fair enough on Redwood maybe not wanting him to go yet - which seems odd, especially since he was the one mentioning that Red needed to go to Bincanar Island, but fine - but surely Red would realize that there'd be other ways of getting there? He's stranded in an unknown world. I'm sure he'd like to get back to his own as soon as possible. And even if he didn't realize that, the other two kids would probably know there are, logically speaking, other methods of transportation to get there.

Missingno. Master
8th March 2012, 2:49 PM
May i be added to the pm list as well? I would hate to miss the new chapters.
Sure thing!


He seems to have accepted everything already, though, what with him catching a pokémon and whatnot. If I'd been him I'd still be at the professor's, asking questions and staring in fear at all these strange, alien concepts. I certainly wouldn't leave the one person who's most likely to have immediate answers - a pokémon professor. But that might just be me.

Fair enough on Redwood maybe not wanting him to go yet - which seems odd, especially since he was the one mentioning that Red needed to go to Bincanar Island, but fine - but surely Red would realize that there'd be other ways of getting there? He's stranded in an unknown world. I'm sure he'd like to get back to his own as soon as possible. And even if he didn't realize that, the other two kids would probably know there are, logically speaking, other methods of transportation to get there.

I've just finished editing the second chapter to include a bit more detail and description, and as it happens, I've actually covered some of the things you mention here. Also, I'll agree that Red seems to be adjusting somewhat quickly to the region, though Glitch Pokémon still freak him out. Plus, all he's adjusted to is the weird looks and the random numbers thrown around, and that's not all that's weird about the region. Certain other things will be distinctly out of the ordinary later on.

Silawen
8th March 2012, 3:02 PM
"The ferry service to Bincanar put all the boat rental businesses out of work, and they had already been struggling given the popularity of traveling over water via Pokémon. The only Pokémon I have here are the starters I give to beginning trainers, and the Water-types don't know Surf yet."

He could have had someone send a pokémon over, though? Same goes for acquiring a pokémon who knows the move 'fly'. Plus, they wouldn't have to, necessarily, rent a boat. They could borrow one from local fishermen, or whatever. People who live close to the water generally make use of it and if the ferry only runs once a month, then there are definitely going to be other boats travelling to Bincanar. I really think you should come up with a reason that doesn't hinge on there not being a way to get to Bincanar.

ESPNfanatic35
9th March 2012, 4:54 AM
Oh, and fyi, in case you didn't catch it earlier, I'm taking a few liberties with the height and weight of the Glitch Pokémon. A lot of them exceed ten feet in height and half a ton in weight.


My bad. I must have not caught that. As for Chapter 2, it was great. Hilarious! I love the mixing up of the city names. Very clever there. Adding Red was a great idea because it gives a "normal person's" perspective on this glitch world that is so normal to Orange and Violet (A number garden? Just awesome!) I also like Orange's incessant talking and Violet's snide remarks and trying to shut him up. Can I be on the PM list btw?

rangernumber-x
9th March 2012, 10:08 PM
Wow. In all of your fics, you always bring something unique that I would've never thought of. I will do a proper reveiw on my next post, but for now can I please be put on the PM list? Thanks.

P.S Do I see a team magma/aqua relationship between team error/debug?

PerseusRad
11th March 2012, 1:04 AM
This is a pretty good fic so far. The description isn't really that bad. Will a Blue/Green Vershuun show up as Red's Brother/Sister? As a final note, there is a move without a type that isn't a glitch. Curse.

The Oncoming Storm
11th March 2012, 7:13 AM
This is a pretty good fic so far. The description isn't really that bad. Will a Blue/Green Vershuun show up as Red's Brother/Sister? As a final note, there is a move without a type that isn't a glitch. Curse.

Actually now as of fifth gen curse is ghost.

Missingno. Master
11th March 2012, 7:34 AM
He could have had someone send a pokémon over, though? Same goes for acquiring a pokémon who knows the move 'fly'. Plus, they wouldn't have to, necessarily, rent a boat. They could borrow one from local fishermen, or whatever. People who live close to the water generally make use of it and if the ferry only runs once a month, then there are definitely going to be other boats travelling to Bincanar. I really think you should come up with a reason that doesn't hinge on there not being a way to get to Bincanar.
As I said earlier, there's still another reason, which I won't reveal at this moment for plot reasons.


My bad. I must have not caught that. As for Chapter 2, it was great. Hilarious! I love the mixing up of the city names. Very clever there. Adding Red was a great idea because it gives a "normal person's" perspective on this glitch world that is so normal to Orange and Violet (A number garden? Just awesome!) I also like Orange's incessant talking and Violet's snide remarks and trying to shut him up. Can I be on the PM list btw?
Thanks! And sure, you can be on the PM list.


Wow. In all of your fics, you always bring something unique that I would've never thought of. I will do a proper reveiw on my next post, but for now can I please be put on the PM list? Thanks.
Glad you like it. You are on the PM list!


P.S Do I see a team magma/aqua relationship between team error/debug?
Maybe. :)


This is a pretty good fic so far. The description isn't really that bad. Will a Blue/Green Vershuun show up as Red's Brother/Sister? As a final note, there is a move without a type that isn't a glitch. Curse.
Well, thanks, I'm glad you like it so far. I don't plan to write Blue or Green in. If- that's if- I decide that Red has any siblings, best you could hope for is a brief mention, at least as far as I can see at this point. And even if Volt Trainer was wrong about Curse now being a Ghost move, the ???-type still did count as a type. Now, non-glitch moves without types, there's the Shadow moves in the GameCube games. Shadow Rush, Shadow Wave, and the like. It's widely accepted that they're the Shadow-type when in reality the game lists no type for them, not even ???.

The next chapter is in progress, but far from done. I've been busy, lately. And by busy I mean totally preoccupied by and obsessed with Pokémon Tower Defense, not to mention MMing for a Shiny Deino in Black Version (with crap results so far, and I've been at it since Thursday). But, this coming week's my Spring break, which gives me plenty of time to write. It's a safe bet that the next chapter will turn up some time this week, but after that, I'll be working on the next chapter of The Epic of Epicness.

PhantomDragon
12th March 2012, 6:31 PM
This is such a good idea! I'm really looking forward to seeing how you write in different Glitch Pokémon into this story, there's so many of them. I have to admit, I don't know much about Glitch Pokémon, but I LOVE the way you incorporated the Safari Park glitch and its effects as well. Could you put me on the PM list please?

President People
12th March 2012, 11:41 PM
I'm loving this so far. This is practically a whole new region's worth of Pokédex entries for many of us, including myself. I'm holding off on exploring the Bulbapedia article all at once; instead, discovering new entries as they come.

I wonder what characters and elements might bleed into 404 from AoA, and vice-versa. And who is narrating. :)


Please add me to the PM list. I am definitely interested in this.

3D992
13th March 2012, 5:44 AM
I really enjoy all your writing, but this is in my oppinion your best yet. I cant wait till chapter 3! I need to study up on my glitch pokemon!

Missingno. Master
14th March 2012, 6:31 PM
Everyone who has asked to be added to the PM list has been added. At least, I think so. If I missed someone, please let me know.


Chapter 3: Red Vs. Violet
~~~~~~~~
The first place Orange, Violet, and Red visited was the Ivadirin City Pokémon Center. The nurse on duty was more than happy to heal their Pokémon.

"So, Orange, Violet," Red said as they all sat down on a comfortable sofa in the center's waiting area, "I've been wondering, why doesn't Professor Redwood give out Bulbasaur, Charmander, and Squirtle to beginning trainers?"

"Those Pokémon are almost unheard of in Tanko," replied Violet. "From what my mom told me, that was what he initially planned to do when he opened his lab, but he had so much trouble getting ahold of any semi-decent amount of them that in order to be ready for three starting trainers one day, he had to just go out and catch the first three Grass, Fire, and Water-types he came across. Those happened to be Bellsprout, Growlithe, and 44Hy. It's not all that balanced, considering that Bellsprout isn't very strong to start off with, and 44Hy has incredible psychic power, but he never intended it to be a permanent arrangement."

"So why is it?" asked Red.

"Turns out, those three are pretty popular among beginning trainers. Even if it's weak initially, turns out there's a lot of trainers who love the idea of eventually having a Victreebel by their side someday. And they all think that Arcanine is as close to a legendary Pokémon as they're ever gonna get. And then there's Q-"

"Who?" interrupted Red. His Pokédex, however, answered, as a large square covered in yellow and black pixellated markings appeared on the screen.

"Q, the Deep Sea Pokémon, and the evolved form of 44Hy," stated the Pokédex. "When it starts to use its immense Psychic powers, its entire body lights up. It can dive underwater to great depths."

"Ah," Red stated. "Another one of those."

"You guys talking about Q?" said Orange. "Q is awesome! And the best part is, it doesn't take much to make a 44Hy evolve either!

"So if Q is so powerful and easy to get, why does anyone choose Growlithe or Bellsprout?" asked Red.

"Well, like I said," Violet replied, "Victreebel and Arcanine are some of the most popular Pokémon in these parts, and not far off from Q in terms of power."

At that moment, the nurse approached the group, carrying a tray which bore five Poké Balls, proclaiming the balls' inhabitants to be at full health.

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"About time!" Orange exclaimed as he burst through the giant "9" which served as the center's front door and into the middle of a nearby vacant lot, the landscape peppered with tufts of grass, chunks of rock, and various sevens and threes. "Let's battle!"

"Will you calm down already?" groaned Violet as she and Red followed.

"Not really," grinned Orange. "Come on, Vi. Battle, you and me!"

"As long as you don't use your 44Hy," replied Violet.

"Aw, come on!" whined Orange.

"Chompy isn't gonna get anywhere if he keeps losing!" exclaimed Violet. "At least with your .4 there's no type disadvantage to worry about."

"...fine," grumbled Orange as he took a Poké Ball off his belt and enlarged it. Orange and Violet then took their places, twenty feet away from each other.

"Relax, Orange," said Red. "You gotta use Pokémon other than your starter sometimes."

"Yeah, I know," conceded Orange as Violet threw a Poké Ball onto the field, unleashing her Bellsprout. Orange sighed, then threw the Poké Ball. ".4, go!"

The Poké Ball split open, and in a flash of light, the hyperactive .4 materialized. Orange then consulted his Pokédex, and brought up a list of attacks his .4 knew.

"Chompy, hit it with Vine Whip!" called Violet.

"Dodge it with Agility, .4!" commanded Orange.

"Bellsprout sprout," said Chompy as a pair of vines emerged from behind its leaves. Chompy then reached for .4 with the vines, but the Caffeine Pokémon began zipping through the air in random directions. Chompy was unable to get in a single hit.

"Now get in close and use TM28!" Orange shouted.

.4 gibbered excitedly as it dive-bombed Chompy and promptly unleashed a small explosion, sending the Bellsprout flying backwards. Though the attack appeared to hit hard, Chompy was able to get back onto its roots, albeit unsteadily.

"Chompy, Vine Whip again!" Violet ordered.

".4, TM05!" commanded Orange.

.4's body took on a mystical-looking blue aura, then zoomed downward, as if to tackle Chompy. It pulled out of the dive at the last second, but then appeared to vanish into thin air.

"What the hell?" Red asked, raising an eyebrow at this unfamiliar technique.

"TM05, an evasive technique," droned Red's Pokédex. "TM05 turns the user invisible, allowing it to avoid oncoming attacks with greater ease."

"Sprooooouuuut," whined Chompy as it flailed its vines around at random, hoping to swat .4 down.

"No chance at all," grinned Orange. ".4, finish it! TM28 attack now!"

"EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!" squealed .4 as the air behind Chompy exploded. The Bellsprout was thrown into the air, but then, its still-flailing vines appeared to hit something solid. Immediately, .4 became visible again as it fell to the ground.

"You got it, Chompy!" encouraged Violet. "Hit it again!"

"Bellsprout sprout... Bell!" exclaimed Chompy suddenly as its body took on a faint green glow. Then, its body seemed to grow out in all directions, its roots thickening, its leaves broadening. After a few seconds, the growing and glowing stopped; Chompy now was equal in height to its trainer's waist.

"Did it evolve?" wondered Orange.

"Does that look like a Weepinbell to you?" Violet replied. "I think Chompy learned how to use Growth! Chompy, Vine Whip once more!"

".4, dodge it!" exclaimed Orange, but the order came too late; Chompy unfurled a pair of thick vines and slammed them into .4, who was still reeling from the last hit. This attack plowed .4 halfway into the ground, where it ceased to move.

"DAMN IT!" roared Orange as he withdrew .4.

"Now we're even," smirked Violet as Bellsprout shrunk back down to its usual size; as the battle had ended, its Growth had worn off. "What did you think of that, Red?"

Red, however, did not reply. He seemed to be deep in thought.

"...Red?" asked Orange. "Hello?"

"Guys, I just thought of something," Red frowned. "The town with Professor Redwood's laboratory, what's it called again?"

"Talpel Town. Why?" replied Orange.

"And what's this city called again?"

"Ivadirin City," Violet answered.

"Could you spell those for me?" Red asked.

Violet and Orange exchanged confused glances, but obliged to Red's request and spelled out the names. Red regarded this new information, and for a few moments, closed his eyes and appeared to think about it. Then, his eyes flew open.

"I knew it," he said. "Something's been nagging me about those names and I finally know what it is."

"What?" asked Orange.

"First off, the little bit I know about this region's locations seemed vaguely familiar to begin with," Red started. "I wasn't sure what it was, mainly because the whole alternate dimension thing was kinda freaking me out, not to mention Orange's weird Pokémon."

"My Pokémon are not weird!" Orange exclaimed indignantly.

"And then the names, something about them was bothering me, and now I know. Talpel Town- you rearrange the letters in that, you get Pallet Town. Same with Ivadirin City- in Kanto, the city closest to Pallet Town is Viridian City. And what was the name of the island Professor Redwood mentioned?"

"B-Bincanar," Violet answered, still surprised at this revelation. "Spelled B-I-N-C-A-N-A-R."

"I thought so," Red grinned. "Across the sea, directly south of Talpel Town?"

"Yeah," Orange said.

"Let me guess, in Kanto, there's an island across the sea, directly south of Pallet Town?" asked Violet.

"Cinnabar Island," Red nodded. "Rearrange the letters in Bincanar, you get Cinnabar."

"OK, this is freaky," Orange sighed, shaking his head.

"For once in your life, you're right," Violet said, earning a dirty look from Orange.

"That was a cheap shot!" Orange snapped. "Hey, Red, why don't you battle Violet now?"

"Hmm?" Red blinked in surprise. "Oh- oh, sure. Fine by me."

"Works for me, too," Violet agreed. With that, Orange walked off to the side as Red took his place.

"Same rules as before," Orange stated. "One Pokémon each."

"Let's go, Chompy!" exclaimed Violet.

"Sprout!" replied Chompy as it made its way back onto the battlefield.

Red took a Poké Ball off his belt, enlarged it, and tossed it out in front of him. "Rattata, let's go!" he shouted.

The ball split open, and Rattata was unleashed in a brilliant flash of light.

"Rattata!" it called out in a shrill voice.

"Aww, you're using Rattata?" whined Orange. "I wanted to see you cream her with your Charmander!"

"Charmander's battled before. Rattata hasn't," Red replied. "I can't just rely on one Pokémon all the time."

"Chompy, Growth!" Violet ordered.

"Rattata, Tackle attack!" Red commanded.

Chompy's body took on a faint green glow, then nearly doubled in size within seconds. Though a bit unnerved at this, Rattata lunged forward regardless and plowed into the large Grass-type, sending it flying backwards.

"Chompy, you got this!" encouraged Violet as the Bellsprout climbed back into an upright position. "Vine Whip now!"

"Bellsprout... Sprout!" exclaimed Chompy as it unfurled a pair of thick vines from behind its leaves.

"Dodge it and use Quick Attack!" Red ordered.

"Rrrrattata!" the Mouse Pokémon cried out as it scrambled away from the oncoming vines and charged at Chompy with great speed. The Bellsprout hastily tried to slap Rattata out of the way with Vine Whip, but its target was moving much too fast. The purple blur that was Rattata slammed Bellsprout backwards. It skidded across the field and stopped at Violet's feet, unconscious.

"Good job, Rattata," smiled Red as he held out the Poké Ball and recalled his Normal-type.

"You did the best you could, Chompy," sighed Violet as she withdrew Bellsprout.

"OK, now let's hit the gym!" Orange exclaimed. Violet responded to this with a withering look.

"You're joking, right, Orange? Chompy is my only Pokémon. Chompy is unconscious. How do you expect me to win a gym battle with a knocked-out Bellsprout?"

"Oh, yeah," Orange replied, grinning sheepishly.
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Half an hour later, the trio exited the Pokémon Center for the second time that day. It didn't take long before .4, Chompy, and Rattata were completely refreshed.

"OK, NOW let's hit the gym!" Orange exclaimed, now with a tinge of whininess in his voice. "Come on, guys! I want to earn me a Soil Badge already!"

"Orange. Relax," Violet sighed. "It's not like the Gym Leader is gonna go anywhere."

"Uh.... Yeah.... About that," Red chuckled weakly; at that moment they had arrived at a large and imposing structure. Above what appeared to be an assortment of roofing tiles glued to a wall hung a large wooden sign, with the words "Ivadirin City Pokémon Gym" painted on it in large black lettering. On the aforementioned roofing tiles was a small piece of paper, attached to what Red took to be a door with duct tape. Orange approached the gym and read the words printed on the paper out loud.

"'I'm away on business. Until my return, Ivadirin Gym is closed. Signed, the Ivadirin Gym Leader.' What the hell?!" Orange demanded indignantly. "Vi, I TOLD you we should have hurried!"

"I doubt he left two minutes ago," Violet snapped, rolling her eyes. "We probably would've passed him on our way here."

"Well, this is disappointing," Red sighed as he looked over the note again, despite having already read it twice.

"I know, right?!" exclaimed Orange. "What are we gonna do until this guy gets back?"

"I guess we gotta go to Rewept City," shrugged Violet. "There's a Pokémon Gym there, too."

"What... you mean we gotta go through Ivadirin Forest?" asked Orange, trepidation in his voice.

"Rewept City... Is that spelled R-E-W-E-P-T?" asked Red.

"Yeah," Violet said.

"I thought so," Red smirked. "Rearrange 'Rewept' and you get 'Pewter'. In Kanto, north of Viridian City is Pewter City."

"Yeah, yeah, fascinating," Orange said dismissively. "But... Can't we just, like, go around Ivadirin Forest or something?"

"Oh, yeah," Violet grinned evilly. "I forgot. You don't like Bug Pokémon, do you, Orange?"

"Shut up," Orange snapped, his face reddening.

"What?" Red asked.

"Look, Bug-types bug me, OK?" Orange said loudly.

"They do?" Red asked. "Why?"

"Because-" Violet started.

"Don't!" Orange yelled. "Look, we can go through the forest, OK? Just keep the Bug-types away from me and don't say another word about this!"

"Fine, fine," Violet replied. Red seemed taken aback at Orange's unexpectedly violent response, but said nothing as Violet led the way.

Before long, they had left Ivadirin City, and were standing before a thick grove of badly scrambled trees. Each tree looked as if it had been chopped into little pieces and glued back together randomly. Just like the trees on Route -1, but worse.

"OK, seriously," Orange said quietly, "I think there's a path that takes us right around this forest."

"You are such a big baby," Violet replied. "Come on."

"It'll be fine, Orange," Red added. "I got Charmander with me. Bug-types won't dare mess with us once I let it out."

"Fine," Orange conceded as he followed Red and Violet into the arboreal maze before them.

Inside the forest, it was dark. Though the trees were horribly jumbled, most of them still had their leaves on the top, and were thus able to block out most of the sunlight. As the trio walked down a narrow path lined with trees, Orange glanced nervously in all directions, and had to fight off the urge to scream when a faint buzzing noise could be heard off in the distance.

After several minutes of walking, Orange spoke up. "Um... You think maybe we could, you know, speed it up a bit? I'd like to get to Rewept City, you know, before it gets too late."

"Before it gets dark and we have to camp out in the forest, you mean," said Violet.

"Orange has a good point," Red stated. "If we had to stop to camp, we might lose our way through the forest, and it'll take us even longer to get to... what was it... Rewept City."

"Fine," Violet sighed. With that, she quickened her pace. Orange hastened to keep up, still glancing around nervously. Then, Red was forced to stop short as Orange screeched to a halt, pointing shakily at a small, green creature which had fallen out of a tree and onto the ground before him.

"Hmm?" Violet asked as she turned around. "Orange, what's wrong?"

"Th... th... th... tha!" stammered Orange as he backed up (nearly knocking Red to the ground in the process) and continued to point. The Pokémon at which Orange was pointing had a body composed of small green spheres. It had big black eyes and a red, "Y"-shaped antennae on its head.

"Oh!'' exclaimed Violet as she looked down and pointed her Pokédex at the newcomer. "A Caterpie!"

"Caterpie, the Worm Pokémon," droned Violet's Pokédex. "A very docile Pokémon of the Bug type, Caterpie feeds almost exclusively on leaves. When threatened, it unleashes a horrible stench from its antennae to drive off the threat."

Violet looked at the Caterpie, who was glancing up at the three humans. Then, she betrayed a small chuckle.

"Orange, I knew Bug-types freaked you out, but a Caterpie? Come on! You're acting like it's a Pinsir or a Z4 or something! Caterpie are the definition of harmless!"

"Bugs are bugs." Orange replied as defiantly as he could while cowering behind Red.

"Well, this bug's gonna be mine," grinned Violet. "Maybe if we have a Bug-type with us you'll actually clam up once in a while!" Wasting no time, Violet stepped back, creating a good distance between herself and the wild Caterpie, then took a Poké Ball off her belt, enlarged it, and threw it. "Chompy, I choose you!" she called.

In a flash of light, Violet's Bellsprout materialized. It stared down the Caterpie and flexed its leaves as if they were arms. Caterpie responded to this by turning to face its adversary and assume what was evidently supposed to be an intimidating battle pose.

"Chompy, Vine Whip now!" ordered Violet.

"Sprout!" exclaimed Chompy as a pair of slender, dark-green vines extended from behind its leaves. The vines zipped forward and slammed into Caterpie. Though the attack knocked Caterpie on its back, it got right back up and charged forward as fast as its stubby feet would carry it (which, Red had to admit, was actually a little faster than he had expected).

"It's using Tackle," warned Violet. "Chompy, block it!"

"Bellsprout sprout," Chompy replied as it moved its still-extended vines so they were positioned directly in Caterpie's way. The Worm Pokémon struggled valiantly, but ultimately, the Bellsprout was able to stop the Tackle attack completely. As Chompy retracted its vines, however, Caterpie showed no signs of giving up, and blasted several strands of what appeared to be white silk threads from its mouth. Within seconds, Chompy was encased in some sort of cocoon. It struggled to move as Caterpie charged forward for a second Tackle.

"Looks like Caterpie used String Shot," Red observed. "Chompy can hardly move.

"Fascinating," Orange replied; he was determinedly looking in any direction other than the battle.

"Chompy, Growth!" Violet commanded.

"Sproooooooouuuut!" bellowed Chompy as a greenish glow peeked through the sticky silk strands. Then, the String Shot was ripped right off as the Bellsprout's small form doubled in size. At the sight of its enemy becoming even larger, Caterpie screeched to a halt and squeaked feebly. As Chompy looked down on the Caterpie it now towered over, the latter Pokémon promptly fell over and was still.

"It's over, Orange," Red said, tapping Orange on the shoulder. "Caterpie passed out from sheer fright!"

"Oh, good," Orange sighed in relief. "As long as she doesn't try to-"

"Poké Ball, go!" Violet called as she heaved a red-and-white sphere at the unconscious Bug-type.

"ARE YOU OUT OF YOUR MIND?!?!" bellowed Orange as the Poké Ball split open and sucked Caterpie inside. Violet, however, did not answer; her eyes were intently fixed on the ball as it wobbled back and forth, a red light blinking on and off on the button. And then, it was still.

"I caught a Caterpie," smirked Violet as she walked over and scooped up the ball. As this happened, Chompy's body shrunk back down to its usual proportions. "I think I'll name him 'Flutters'."

"'Flutters'?" repeated Orange. "You realize you caught a Caterpie, right? Not a Butterfree?"

"It'll become a Butterfree, moron. I'm planning ahead," Violet answered smoothly. "Same reason Bellsprout's name is Chompy. It's Victreebel who are known for chomping. I don't want to give Pokémon nicknames that won't suit them after they evolve."

"Like naming a Magikarp 'Fails'." nodded Red. "Suits it as a Magikarp, but once it evolves..."

"Exactly," smiled Violet.

"Look, can we just get the hell out of here?" pleaded Orange.

"Yeah, let's get moving," Red agreed.

"I guess so," sighed Violet. With that, she once again took the lead as the trio continued through the forest.


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End of Chapter 3.

3D992
14th March 2012, 7:04 PM
Yay! A new chapter! I wonder if Brock will be Kcrob?!

Missingno. Master
14th March 2012, 7:15 PM
Yay! A new chapter! I wonder if Brock will be Kcrob?!

Oh, I have something in mind for the Gym Leaders.

ChaosMudkip
14th March 2012, 8:37 PM
Oh, god. Please don't trans-gender them.

rangernumber-x
14th March 2012, 9:50 PM
Gags and glitches galore...It can only be error 404!

"Those Pokémon are almost unheard of in Tanko," replied Violet. "From what my mom told me, that was what he initially planned to do when he opened his lab, but he had so much trouble getting ahold of any semi-decent amount of them that in order to be ready for three starting trainers one day, he had to just go out and catch the first three Grass, Fire, and Water-types he came across. Those happened to be Bellsprout, Growlithe, and 44Hy. It's not all that balanced, considering that Bellsprout isn't very strong to start off with, and 44Hy has incredible psychic power, but he never intended it to be a permanent arrangement."
I've always wondered why the starters are impossible to find in the wild, but the professor always has enough for everybody who asks.

"Q, the Deep Sea Pokémon, and the evolved form of 44Hy," stated the Pokédex. "When it starts to use its immense Psychic powers, its entire body lights up. It can dive underwater to great depths."
How does a lump of static evolve?

"About time!" Orange exclaimed as he burst through the giant "9" which served as the center's front door and into the middle of a nearby vacant lot, the landscape peppered with tufts of grass, chunks of rock, and various sevens and threes. "Let's battle!"
That doesn't sound like a very good door...

"For once in your life, you're right," Violet said, earning a dirty look from Orange.

"That was a cheap shot!" Orange snapped. But true.

"'I'm away on business. Until my return, Ivadirin Gym is closed. Signed, the Ivadirin Gym Leader.' What the hell?!" Orange demanded indignantly. "Vi, I TOLD you we should have hurried!"
I wonder which team leader will be the leader of this gym? I guess, as it's the samekanto/the games, it'll be team debug.

"Look, Bug-types bug me, OK?" Orange said loudly.
There's always one.

"Like naming a Magikarp 'Fails'." nodded Red. "Suits it as a Magikarp, but once it evolves..."
Perfect nickname. You could carry the nickname on, as irony. A bit like Jack from AoA nicknaming primape and rayquaza 'persuation' and 'reasoning'.

And finally:

Oh, I have something in mind for the Gym Leaders. Just PLEASE don't transgender them. Change their pokemon types, names, hack, even TURN them into pokemon. Just not transgender. I would never look at misty the same.

Osha Say What?
14th March 2012, 9:52 PM
Interesting chapter. I can't believe that Orange is the one is afraid of Bug type Pokémon, I would have thought that Violet would have been afraid of Bug types. And go Violet on catching Caterpie! I can tell she is going to have fun torturing Orange with it.

3D992
14th March 2012, 10:09 PM
Oh goodness... a girl brock... LOL!!!

ga'hoolefan
14th March 2012, 10:15 PM
I like this fanfic. The names were clever, and I'm learning more about glitch Pokemon than ever before. Will we be seeing glitches from Gens 2-5? Also, are the Pokemon exclusively glitches and Kanto pokes, or are there others too?

Knightfall
16th March 2012, 1:55 AM
Still on track!

Great chapter. Agree with most of the others: please don't transgender the gym leaders!

I'm sure there are other perfectly reasonable ways of screwing up everything I once thought I knew about the Kanto region.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

PS: rangernumberX, the turning the leaders into Pokemon idea would be interesting.

GroundBlaze
16th March 2012, 5:56 PM
Once again great chapter

why not make Violet a "female brock" the same way Orange got Misty's bug phobia? seems like a good parallel

Really getting a new vocabulary on glitch pokemon as well as a slight nostalgia for Red (the game)

keep up the good work.

Missingno. Master
16th March 2012, 8:33 PM
Oh, god. Please don't trans-gender them.


Just PLEASE don't transgender them. Change their pokemon types, names, hack, even TURN them into pokemon. Just not transgender. I would never look at misty the same.



Agree with most of the others: please don't transgender the gym leaders!

I'm sure there are other perfectly reasonable ways of screwing up everything I once thought I knew about the Kanto region.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

I'll admit transgendering the Kanto Gym Leaders was one of my first ideas. Then I realized I would have to do that to Misty. Somehow the idea didn't seem as appealing anymore. Well, I know how I'll do it now, and I will say it right now, for the most part, the Gym Leaders will be the opposite gender of their Kanto counterpart, but they won't be full-on opposite gender copies. They will be distinctly different people.



How does a lump of static evolve?
In this case, by reaching level 6. On that subject, 44Hy's evolution isn't far off.


That doesn't sound like a very good door...
Eh, works for them.


But true.
I guess so, yeah.


I wonder which team leader will be the leader of this gym? I guess, as it's the samekanto/the games, it'll be team debug.
I won't say just yet.


Perfect nickname. You could carry the nickname on, as irony. A bit like Jack from AoA nicknaming primape and rayquaza 'persuation' and 'reasoning'.
Yeah, I guess so. I personally don't have a real knack for nicknames. In fact, Violet's tendency to nickname her Pokémon is my attempt in improving myself in that area.


Interesting chapter. I can't believe that Orange is the one is afraid of Bug type Pokémon, I would have thought that Violet would have been afraid of Bug types. And go Violet on catching Caterpie! I can tell she is going to have fun torturing Orange with it.
It's almost too predictable to make the female characters afraid of Bug-types. I'm trying to steer clear of that sort of thing.


I like this fanfic. The names were clever, and I'm learning more about glitch Pokemon than ever before. Will we be seeing glitches from Gens 2-5? Also, are the Pokemon exclusively glitches and Kanto pokes, or are there others too?
Glad you like it so far! As for your question, I haven't actually decided if I'm going to be introducing any Generation II and on Pokémon, glitch or otherwise. The teams I have planned for the three main characters so far consist of Generation I Pokémon.


Once again great chapter

why not make Violet a "female brock" the same way Orange got Misty's bug phobia? seems like a good parallel

Really getting a new vocabulary on glitch pokemon as well as a slight nostalgia for Red (the game)

keep up the good work.

Thanks!

Making Violet a "female Brock"... it's an interesting idea. I'll agree, it does seem like a good parallel. I'll give it some thought.


I'm in the process of working on the next chapter... for The Epic of Epicness. I don't want to neglect either one of my fanfics. I'll probably alternate between fics; that is, once I get the next EoE chapter, I'll work on Chapter 4 for this one, then on the next EoE chapter, and so on and so forth.

UltimatePokemonExpert
17th March 2012, 12:03 AM
Interesting idea, it's really cool. Please add me to the PM list.

ESPNfanatic35
17th March 2012, 12:53 AM
Another great chapter. I like how well you follow the game but add your own great touch to it with all of the glitches. I love moments like this:


"Cinnabar Island," Red nodded. "Rearrange the letters in Bincanar, you get Cinnabar."

"OK, this is freaky," Orange sighed, shaking his head.

When the normal world seems so surreal to them. I do kind of like the role reversal where you have the guy terrified of bugs rather than the girl. I immediately thought of Misty as soon as Orange was freaking out over the bugs. Violet is very clever to plan ahead with her nicknames; seems like a lot of trainers in this glitch world like planning ahead (like choosing a weak Bellspout to start with but reaping the rewards of a Victrebell later).

Missingno. Master
30th March 2012, 5:40 AM
Interesting idea, it's really cool. Please add me to the PM list.
Sure thing! Glad you like it.


Another great chapter. I like how well you follow the game but add your own great touch to it with all of the glitches. I love moments like this:



When the normal world seems so surreal to them. I do kind of like the role reversal where you have the guy terrified of bugs rather than the girl. I immediately thought of Misty as soon as Orange was freaking out over the bugs. Violet is very clever to plan ahead with her nicknames; seems like a lot of trainers in this glitch world like planning ahead (like choosing a weak Bellspout to start with but reaping the rewards of a Victrebell later).

Kind of another example of how Tanko is the opposite of Kanto. In Kanto, an NPC or two will whine about having been sold a "useless" Magikarp, seemingly not aware of the existence of Gyarados. In Tanko, trainers tend to think ahead a little bit.


The next chapter is in progress, but it won't be done for a while. I've been extraordinarily busy over the past couple of weeks, mainly with school and my other fanfic. I should have it done some time in early April.

Missingno. Master
5th April 2012, 5:23 PM
Chapter 4: Flight Of The Z4
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The walk through the Ivadirin Forest was a slow one; the path was narrow and constantly twisting and turning. It really was a natural maze. To Orange, however, it seemed to take an eternity; Violet was leading the way, and had insisted upon allowing her new Caterpie to ride on her shoulder. Though Flutters appeared happy with this arrangement, the same could not be said for Orange, who spent most of the time cowering behind Red, much to his amusement and slight annoyance.

"Orange, come on," sighed Red for what had to be the ninth or tenth time. "It's a Caterpie. It's not gonna hurt you at all."

"You don't know that," replied Orange. "They have a mean Tackle attack, you know.

"Why don't you like Bug Pokémon anyway?"

"Because-" started Violet.

"Don't you dare!" Orange threatened as menacingly as he could while keeping his distance from the Caterpie. "Don't tell him!"

"Tell me what?" said Red.

"Nothing. It's nothing," Orange replied a little too quickly, his face reddening. Violet smirked at the sight of him but kept quiet.

"Hey!" came a voice from behind the trio. They simultaneously wheeled around and saw a young boy making his way through the dense, scrambled foliage. He was wearing a white shirt and brown shorts, a wide-brimmed hat, and he carried a butterfly net over his shoulder. "Are you three Pokémon trainers?" he asked.

"Yeah, we are," replied Violet. "I'm Violet, and this is Red, and this is Orange."

"Cool. My name's Jimmy, how about a battle?"

"Sure," Orange stated, but Violet interrupted him.

"Excuse me, Orange. I think this is as good a time as any to let my newest Pokémon gain some experience."

Orange said nothing, but hastened to stand directly behind Red as Violet and Jimmy stood and faced each other, leaving a large amount of admittedly narrow space between them for the battle.

"Two Pokémon each?" asked Jimmy.

"Fine by me," said Violet.

"Weedle! I choose you!" exclaimed Jimmy as he threw a Poké Ball. In a flash of light, a small, light yellow creature emerged. It was similarly proportioned to a Caterpie, and sported a large red nose. In place of Caterpie's Y-shaped antennae, Weedle sported a shining silver horn. Violet held her Pokédex out and aimed it at Jimmy's Pokémon.

"Weedle, the Hairy Bug Pokémon," the Pokédex droned. "Weedle possess an uncanny sense of smell, which it usually uses to tell different kinds of leaves apart. It fends off predators with its large, poisonous stinger."

'Let's go, Flutters!" Violet exclaimed to the Caterpie on her shoulder. Flutters chattered enthusiastically in response and leapt off, landing expertly on the ground and staring down Weedle.

"Weedle! String Shot!" ordered Jimmy.

"Dodge it!" called Violet.

From the tip of Weedle's horn exploded three strands of what appeared to be white silk. Flutters rolled off to the right, evading these strands altogether.

"Flutters, Tackle attack now!"

Flutters dashed forward as fast as its stubby legs would allow, and it plowed into Weedle's side.

"You gonna take that from the likes of a Caterpie?!" exclaimed Jimmy. "Weedle, Poison Sting attack!"

"Weeedle!" responded Weedle as its horn began to emanate a soft, purple glow. Then, a barrage of glowing purple needles were launched from its horn.

"Use String Shot on the needles!" Violet commanded.

Flutters unleashed multiple strands of string from its mouth, each string managing to get stuck on a poison needle. On Violet's order, the Caterpie then jerked its head in all directions, swinging the strings around. Finally, it broke off the String Shot strands from its mouth, causing the needles to fly back towards Weedle.

"What the..." muttered Jimmy, apparently too stunned by the Caterpie's skill to order any sort of defensive maneuver. Far too late, he noticed that Weedle had been struck by its own attack, and was now struggling to stay upright.

"Finish it, Flutters! Use Tackle!" Violet ordered triumphantly.

Flutters charged forward again, and slammed Weedle to the ground. This time, it did not get back up.

"Lucky shot," snapped Jimmy as he held out the Poké Ball, recalling Weedle. Then, he took out another Poké Ball and enlarged it. "But with this one, you don't stand a chance! I've just caught this one, but it's really powerful!" And he threw the ball. "Z4, I choose you!"

In a flash of light, a cube-shaped yellow Pokémon with numerous black and red markings appeared. It appeared to be about half the size of Orange's 44hy. As it floated in midair, it emitted a continuous low-pitched buzzing noise. Immediately, Orange let out an impossibly high-pitched shriek and slumped to the ground, unconscious. Violet held her Pokédex out again.

"Z4, the Box Bee Pokémon," it stated. "Z4 has the power to grow incredibly pointy stingers from any point on its body. Commonly found in forests, where they travel in large swarms."

Flutters, meanwhile, though still conscious, wasn't reacting to Z4's appearance all that much better than Orange was. It inched backwards, giving off weak, nervous cries.

"You got this, Flutters," Violet said soothingly. "Use String Shot."

"Z4, Horn Drill now!" commanded Jimmy.

Neither Pokémon obeyed, however. Flutters merely started to cry, while Z4 simply rose up into the air and increased the volume of its buzzing.

"Come on, Flutters," pleaded Violet.

"Z4! Get down here this instant!" Jimmy roared.

At this, Z4 dove back down- and right at Jimmy. Jimmy began backing off nervously as a rapidly spinning horn-like protrusion erupted from the front of Z4's body.

Red opened his mouth, but before he could say anything, a chorus of ominous buzzing noises started up in the distance. Nervously, Red, Violet, Jimmy, and Orange, who had just regained consciousness, looked in the direction of the sound, and saw a horrific sight in the sky.

No fewer than three hundred Z4 were visible in the sky, and they were all making their way towards the group.

"It's... whole... swarm..." Orange muttered weakly before passing back out. Red and Violet exchanged panicked glances.

"RUN!" exclaimed Red.

Violet scooped up the unconscious Orange in her arms. Jimmy tried to withdraw his Z4, but once it joined with the oncoming swarm, he gave up the attempt and tossed the Poké Ball aside. As the four trainers made a break for it, a whimpering noise made Violet screech to a halt.

"I forgot Flutters!" she gasped. Turning around, she shifted Orange so her right arm was free. She then held out the Poké Ball, and called out, "Flutters, return now!"

A beam of red light burst forth from the ball's button, but by that time, the Z4 were closing in on them. One of the Z4 blocked the beam as two more closed in on the Caterpie.

"No!" exclaimed Violet. Without thinking, she dropped Orange to the ground and charged into the oncoming Z4.

"HEY!" exclaimed Jimmy. "What are you doing?! Charging into a swarm of Z4 is nothing short of suicide!"

Violet, however, did not heed this warning, and pushed her way past several dozen Z4. This, however, angered them. Their buzzing immediately became deeper and more menacing, and several of them sprouted numerous spikes.

Flutters watched as its trainer fought through the murderous swarm of Bug and Poison-types, fully realizing for the first time that this human really, really cared about it. Touched by this realization, the Caterpie sprang into action. It began rapid-firing its String Shot in all directions, causing many Z4 to get stuck to each other, including a duo who were about to sting Violet from behind. It began to make its way towards Violet, but at that moment, two Z4 slammed into Flutters from either side, nearly squashing it. The Z4 then began to rise up, intent on carrying the Caterpie away. Upon seeing this, Violet held out the Poké Ball and tried recalling it once more, but again, the beam was blocked by multiple Z4. As tears formed in Violet's eyes, Flutters struggled and squirmed from between the two Z4, but to no effect. Then, suddenly, the two Z4 were blinded as their captive began to glow brightly with white light.

Violet gasped, her eyes wide, as her little Caterpie, glowing brightly, started to change shape, and knocked its two Z4 captors aside in the process. The bright light had the added effect of scaring the Z4, it seemed, as many of them were flying away now. As this included the two Z4 that held the Caterpie in midair in the first place, Flutters began to fall. Violet ran forwards and caught her Pokémon in her arms just as the glowing ceased.

Flutters was definitely not a Caterpie anymore. Its wormlike body was now completely solid, encased in a steel-like green shell. "Metapod, Metapod," the new Pokémon said.

"Cool," grinned Red as Orange began to regain consciousness.

"Awesome!" exclaimed Jimmy. "Your Caterpie evolved into Metapod!"

"Huh... do what now?" muttered Orange as he unsteadily climbed to his feet, only to jump about a foot in the air when Violet proudly showed him her newly evolved Pokémon. Red, meanwhile, held out his Pokédex in the direction of Violet's Pokémon.

"Metapod, the Cocoon Pokémon, and the evolved form of Caterpie. It is encased in a nearly unbreakable shell for defense. Its Harden technique only improves on this defense."

"Yeah, cool, whatever," Orange stammered. "Now can you please put it back in its ball- LOOK OUT!"

For at that moment, one of the remaining Z4 darted forward, a large horn protruding from its front. It dove right at Violet's back. Violet wheeled around and shrieked at the sight. Flutters, however, wriggled out of Violet's arms and lunged forward, its shell now glowing with green light.

"It's using Harden," observed Jimmy. "And that Z4 is using Fury Attack."

Z4 and Flutters collided in midair. A loud crunching noise was heard, causing Violet to inhale sharply- but as the Metapod landed on the ground, it became clear who had won out; the Z4 was withdrawing the shattered remnants of its horn back into its body. It then gave three sharp buzzes, and led the few remaining Z4 away.

"That," breathed Jimmy, "was close."

"Too close," agreed Orange. "Vi, did you really charge into an oncoming swarm of Z4?"

"I had to save Flutters," replied Violet. "Besides, it's not like they actually managed to harm me or anything."

"You're extremely lucky," insisted Jimmy. "It looks like the most you got were a few scratches."

At this, Violet looked at her arms, and realized that they were indeed covered in tiny scratches.

"I'm gonna get going," continued Jimmy. "I want to see if I can catch a more obedient Z4."

"Good luck with that," said Red.

"Thanks! Bye!" called Jimmy as he started heading off in the direction from which the group had come in the first place.

"It's getting late," stated Violet once Jimmy was out of sight. "I think we should set up camp."

"Oh, HELL no!" declared Orange. "There is no way I'm gonna camp out in a forest just teeming with Bug-types!"

"Well, Red and I are," said Violet, "so if you want to go off by yourself into the Ivadirin Forest in the middle of the night, be my guest."

"Damn you," snarled Orange as he pulled a tightly rolled up, bright orange package out of his backpack. He unfurled it and let it fall to the ground, allowing Red to see that it was in fact a sleeping bag. Violet did the same thing, setting up a purple sleeping bag.

"...uh..." Red began.

"Hmm?" said Violet, looking up. "Let me guess, Red- you don't have a sleeping bag?"

"I do," Red stated, taking a crimson rolled-up object out of his backpack, "but it kinda ripped."

"That's no problem!" exclaimed Violet as she picked Flutters back up. "Flutters, can you use String Shot to fix Red's sleeping bag?"

"Metapod," replied Flutters, moving in a manner that seemed similar to nodding. Red unrolled the sleeping bag and held it up; it had split right down a seam on the side.

The Metapod set to work, slowly and carefully releasing sticky strands of string which glued the bag back together.

"Thanks, Flutters," smiled Red as Violet returned her Metapod to its Poké Ball.

Within minutes, Red, Violet, and Orange were all in their sleeping bags, and nearly asleep. Just as Red was about to drift off to sleep, a loud crunching sound in a nearby bush (which appeared to have gravel, roof tiles, and large drops of water in place of leaves) made him sit up. Peering into the darkness, Red could see the shadowy silhouette of a person approaching them.

"Psst!" hissed Red. "Orange! Violet! Wake up, quick!"

"Mmph... wha? Red, what are you- WHAT THE?!" screamed Orange as he suddenly noticed the shadowy figure coming closer.

"Hey!" shouted Violet. "Who are you?!"

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 4.

3D992
5th April 2012, 11:01 PM
Before the sleeping bag scene you said red instead of orange. Very minor.

Knightfall
5th April 2012, 11:11 PM
New chapter, simply glorious!

Shorter than usual, I think, but much happens plotwise. So it evens out.

Our trio isn't through Ivadrin forest, but they battle one of the ever present bug catchers, and manage to upset a swarm of Z4 (which sounds like the creepiest glitch Pokemon yet...all those stingers....).
And of course Flutter's evolution to Metapod was unexpected.


"Damn you," snarled Orange as he pulled a tightly rolled up, bright orange package out of his backpack.

I think you meant to put Orange not Red.

Anyways great chapter as usual, can't wait until the next one.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

GroundBlaze
6th April 2012, 3:04 AM
Yay a new chapter, just in time for the weekend



"Flutters watched as its trainer fought through the murderous swarm of Bug and Poison-types, fully realizing for the first time that this human really, really cared about it. Touched by this realization, the Caterpie sprang into action. It began rapid-firing its String Shot in all directions, causing many Z4 to get stuck to each other, including a duo who were about to sting Violet from behind. It began to make its way towards Violet, but at that moment, two Z4 slammed into Flutters from either side, nearly squashing it. The Z4 then began to rise up, intent on carrying the Caterpie away. Upon seeing this, Violet held out the Poké Ball and tried recalling it once more, but again, the beam was blocked by multiple Z4. As tears formed in Violet's eyes, Flutters struggled and squirmed from between the two Z4, but to no effect. Then, suddenly, the two Z4 were blinded as their captive began to glow brightly with white light."

so touching (tears up) you go flutters



"Mmph... wha? Red, what are you- WHAT THE?!" screamed Orange as he suddenly noticed the shadowy figure coming closer."who could it be? the suspense is quite thrilling

Missingno. Master
6th April 2012, 3:43 AM
Before the sleeping bag scene you said red instead of orange. Very minor.
Fixed, thanks for pointing that out.


New chapter, simply glorious!
Thanks!



Shorter than usual, I think, but much happens plotwise. So it evens out.
I always try for one or the other, if not both.



Our trio isn't through Ivadrin forest, but they battle one of the ever present bug catchers, and manage to upset a swarm of Z4 (which sounds like the creepiest glitch Pokemon yet...all those stingers....).
Oddly enough, Z4 can't learn any Poison-type moves. It happens to learn a handful of moves that involve horns or stingers, though. Fury Attack, Horn Drill, Horn Attack...



And of course Flutter's evolution to Metapod was unexpected.
Given the rate at which Caterpie evolve, if it hadn't happened in this chapter, you probably would've seen it coming in the next one.



I think you meant to put Orange not Red.
Indeed I did, it's been fixed.



Anyways great chapter as usual, can't wait until the next one.

Knightfall signing off...;005;
Glad you liked it!


Yay a new chapter, just in time for the weekend
404 Error: enhancing weekend experiences since 2012.


so touching (tears up) you go flutters
I take it you liked that scene.


who could it be? the suspense is quite thrilling
You'll find out in the next chapter.


Speaking of the next chapter, it won't be out right away, not until after the next Epic of Epicness chapter comes out. That story is coming to its conclusion fairly soon, however, so this one will be seeing at least semi-regular updates before too long.

3D992
6th April 2012, 6:22 AM
Im going to guess the figure is a gym leader.

ESPNfanatic35
7th April 2012, 6:39 AM
Awesome chapter! Intense fight scene with the Z4 and also the scene with Flutters and Violet was very touching. Excited to find out just WHY Orange hates Bug-types so much. Also, nice cliffhanger. Good job on this chapter!

Shymain
7th April 2012, 6:54 AM
Wow, cool fanfic! Just read the whole thing! There is one mistake, though:



"Nothing. It's nothing," Orange replied a little two quickly, his face reddening. Violet smirked at the sight of him but kept quiet.

Wher it says two, it should be too. Please add me to the PM list. Keep up the good work!

Shymain

PhantomDragon
8th April 2012, 3:36 PM
A black and yellow cube of static. With stingers.
That's just creepy.
This fic is certainly highly educational about Glitch Pokémon. Which I find really cool.
Sorry about the lack of focus. >.< Cool chapter, with the swarming and all. I like the way you make the normal and the Glitch Pokémon interact, making the Glitch Pokémon seem more normal. Did that make sense?
Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter of both this and the Epic of Epicness with much eagerness and invisible candyfloss.

Metal Bagon
11th April 2012, 10:58 PM
I'll admit transgendering the Kanto Gym Leaders was one of my first ideas. Then I realized I would have to do that to Misty. Somehow the idea didn't seem as appealing anymore. Well, I know how I'll do it now, and I will say it right now, for the most part, the Gym Leaders will be the opposite gender of their Kanto counterpart, but they won't be full-on opposite gender copies. They will be distinctly different people.


So I assume will Giovanni will be a Care Bear?

Anyway great chapter packed with good free-flowing humor.

Rotomknight
13th April 2012, 4:23 PM
Very nice. Good job. I have a request or two.
1. Please add a little more humor. Maybe not as much as the adventure of adventurenesss cycle. But a little more PLEZE.
2. Please add me to the pm list.

Missingno. Master
17th April 2012, 3:30 PM
Im going to guess the figure is a gym leader.
I won't say whether you're right or not. You will, however, find out soon enough.


Awesome chapter! Intense fight scene with the Z4 and also the scene with Flutters and Violet was very touching. Excited to find out just WHY Orange hates Bug-types so much. Also, nice cliffhanger. Good job on this chapter!
Thanks, glad you like it!


Wow, cool fanfic! Just read the whole thing! There is one mistake, though:

Wher it says two, it should be too. Please add me to the PM list. Keep up the good work!

Shymain
Mistake fixed, thanks. And you're added.


A black and yellow cube of static. With stingers.
That's just creepy.
This fic is certainly highly educational about Glitch Pokémon. Which I find really cool.
Sorry about the lack of focus. >.< Cool chapter, with the swarming and all. I like the way you make the normal and the Glitch Pokémon interact, making the Glitch Pokémon seem more normal. Did that make sense?
Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter of both this and the Epic of Epicness with much eagerness and invisible candyfloss.

Well, I just posted the new Epic of Epicness chapter, so yeah. That also means, FYI, that I will begin work on the next chapter for this. I'm sorry about the lengthy wait, but once the Adventure of Adventureness series is over (which won't be much longer now, there's only one more chapter and the epilogue left), this will see slightly more frequent updates.


So I assume will Giovanni will be a Care Bear?

Anyway great chapter packed with good free-flowing humor.
Glad you like it. As for the Giovanni equivalent... I won't reveal any details. Not just yet.


Very nice. Good job. I have a request or two.
1. Please add a little more humor. Maybe not as much as the adventure of adventurenesss cycle. But a little more PLEZE.
2. Please add me to the pm list.

1: I'll see what I can do. A lot of the Adventure of Adventureness humor revolves around the lack of a fourth wall, which is far from what I'm doing here.
2: Sure thing!

As I stated above, I'm about to start work on the next chapter. I can't give you any sort of estimate as to when it'll be done, especially since I have exams coming up within the month. But it will be out eventually, you can count on that. I'm likely to get it done before the month is out, but don't quote me on that.

PhantomDragon
17th April 2012, 5:36 PM
I can't give you any sort of estimate as to when it'll be done, especially since I have exams coming up within the month. But it will be out eventually, you can count on that. I'm likely to get it done before the month is out, but don't quote me on that.

Nice to have an estimate at least. Good luck on your exams!

Deadly.Braviary
18th April 2012, 6:38 AM
I can't believe I haven't seen this yet! Where have you been hiding, you frickin awesome fic?!

While this may not be as ROFL-inducing as your AoA series, it is pretty funny and interesting. It's gonna be interesting to see how Red reacts to glitch cities and stuff.

Like I said, it might not be that funny, but give it time to mature and maybe we'll have an epic of funnyness!! Speaking of '-ness'... Error of Errorness crossover, later on?

Oh, and I almost forgot. Add me to the PM List.

TheDarkDragons
23rd April 2012, 5:25 AM
As I posted about 15 minutes ago in The Adventure of Adventureness, I will be keeping up with this story, so can I be added to the PM list please? I'll start reviewing on Chapter 5. The other 4 I might do to, but I doubt it. ;479; if it gets at least half as funny as the Adventure of Adventureness series.
Speaking of Rotom, would it be possible for a Rotom to exist safely (and be pretty powerful) in the glitched world, since it has power over machines?

Missingno. Master
24th April 2012, 4:39 PM
Nice to have an estimate at least. Good luck on your exams!
Thanks!


I can't believe I haven't seen this yet! Where have you been hiding, you frickin awesome fic?!
Mostly on the second to seventh pages of the fanfic section. It's not quite as popular as my other one, and the infrequent updates don't help.


While this may not be as ROFL-inducing as your AoA series, it is pretty funny and interesting. It's gonna be interesting to see how Red reacts to glitch cities and stuff.
Thank you. I assure you, Red will have some pretty humorous reactions.


Like I said, it might not be that funny, but give it time to mature and maybe we'll have an epic of funnyness!! Speaking of '-ness'... Error of Errorness crossover, later on?
I haven't ruled out the possibility, and yet I'm not sure how I would handle it. Only time will tell with that one.


Oh, and I almost forgot. Add me to the PM List.
Consider it done.


As I posted about 15 minutes ago in The Adventure of Adventureness, I will be keeping up with this story, so can I be added to the PM list please? I'll start reviewing on Chapter 5. The other 4 I might do to, but I doubt it. ;479; if it gets at least half as funny as the Adventure of Adventureness series.
Sure thing, you're added.


Speaking of Rotom, would it be possible for a Rotom to exist safely (and be pretty powerful) in the glitched world, since it has power over machines?
That won't actually be explored. I've come to the decision that this story will encompass only Generation I Pokémon, moves, and move compatibility. No abilities, either. This sort of thing will become evident in the next chapter, where a Pokémon uses a move that it can only learn in Generation I via a TM. I won't be sticking to the whole level move restriction either, though, not unlike the anime and The Adventure of Adventureness.

On the subject of the next chapter, I'm working on it right now. If all goes well, it may be up by the weekend. And now that The Adventure of Adventureness series is done, this might see more frequent updates. After my exams, anyway.

Z-nogyroP
24th April 2012, 11:54 PM
This sort of thing will become evident in the next chapter, where a Pokémon uses a move that it can only learn in Generation I via a TM

May I assume a Persian will be using BubbleBeam? Or a Machamp with Fissure? Oh, and also, when will Missingno. appear(or will it)? Staying tuned for more!

Missingno. Master
25th April 2012, 8:31 PM
May I assume a Persian will be using BubbleBeam? Or a Machamp with Fissure?
You can assume both those things if you want. Doesn't mean they'll happen. Not now, anyway.


Oh, and also, when will Missingno. appear(or will it)? Staying tuned for more!

As to that, I cannot say just yet. You can be sure that Missingno. will make at least one appearance, but I won't say when.

Missingno. Master
27th April 2012, 12:30 AM
Chapter 5: Meet Team Debug
~~~~~~~~
Red, Orange, and Violet were now fully awake as the shadowy figure approached them. Violet slowly reached towards her belt. As her fingers brushed against Chompy's Poké Ball, however, the figure stepped out of the shadows, revealing himself to be a grown man who now looked more hopelessly lost than dangerous. He was wearing odd, white clothing, and a large, green "D" could be seen on the front of his shirt.

"Hello?" said Red cautiously. The man jumped and finally looked at the trio.

"Wha? Oh... Oh, it's just a bunch of kids," he muttered, more to himself than anything, it seemed. "What are you doing camping out in Ivadirin Forest anyway? Don't you know it's dangerous?"

"Dangerous?" repeated Red. Orange, however, noticed the green "D" on the man's shirt, and his eyes narrowed.

"Wait a minute!" he exclaimed. "You're with that horrible Team Debug, aren't you?!"

"Horrible? Hardly," snorted the man. "Wait- are you three with Team Error?!"

"What? No!" exclaimed Violet, but too late; the man seemed beyond reason.

"I knew it. Team Error found out about our plan and now they're sending you secret agents to foil it! Well it won't work! We will eliminate the Glitch Pokémon and restore Tanko to its former glory!"

"...You're a loony," stated Orange after a moment's stunned silence. "You know that, right?"

In response, the man assumed an aggressive stance and took a Poké Ball off his belt. At this, Red, Orange, and Violet leapt out of their sleeping bags and stood upright, each of them grasping a Poké Ball of their own.

The man threw his ball first. "Take this, Team Error!" he bellowed.

In a flash of light, what appeared to be a large, knotted clump of blue seaweed materialized. Poking out from the bottom of the clump were two small, red feet. A pair of large, white eyes could be seen in the clump, poking out from the small gaps between the creepers. Violet grabbed her Pokédex and held it out at the Pokémon.

"Tangela, the Vine Pokémon," droned the device. "Tangela are immensely shy. If a Tangela's vines break off in battle, they regrow almost instantly."

"I got this," Red assured Orange and Violet. He threw the ball he was holding and shouted, "Charmander, let's go!"

In another flash of light, Red's Charmander appeared. It stood its ground, its tail flame blazing brightly in the night, and stared down the Tangela, whose eyes narrowed slightly at the sight of its fiery opponent.

"Tangela! Constrict!" roared the Team Debug grunt.

"Tang tang Tangela!" exclaimed Tangela as a pair of teal vines erupted forth from its tangled body and made to snake around Charmander.

"Charmander, Ember!" ordered Red.

"Char char!" Charmander replied as it wheeled around and flicked its tail back and forth, sending small flames flying at the Vine Pokémon. Tangela screeched in pain as the flames made contact, and the vines shrunk back into its body.

"Tangela, don't be such a wuss!" the grunt growled. "Use your Vine Whip!"

"Tang!" exclaimed Tangela as the vines re-emerged. This time, it slapped Charmander with the vines, knocking it back.

"Charmander, use your Scratch attack now!" Red commanded.

Charmander held up its right arm and charged at Tangela. Upon reaching it, Charmander brought its arm down and scratched its vine-cloaked adversary. The attack appeared to have little effect, however.

"Tangela have high Defense," sneered the man as Charmander backed away. "You honestly expect a physical move to harm it that much? Pathetic! Tangela, finish it! Skull Bash now!"

"Tangela la!" Tangela replied as it leaned forward and charged right at Charmander.

"Ember!" Red called out desperately!

Charmander wheeled around once more and sent a fresh wave of flames at the oncoming Tangela. It screeched in pain yet again, but this time collapsed to the ground and made no effort whatsoever to get up.

"Tangela, return," sighed the man as he held the Poké Ball out. Once Tangela was back in its ball, he turned to glare at the trio.

"What are you looking at us like that for?" demanded Orange.

"You may win this time, Team Error, but mark my words-"

"WE'RE NOT TEAM ERROR!" shouted Orange, Red, and Violet simultaneously.

"...Oh. Yeah, I guess not. I don't think they hire kids anyway," muttered the man. "And you're not wearing the uniform- those guys tend to be very brazen about that sort of thing. And you used a Charmander- Team Error goons wouldn't be caught dead with natural Pokémon."

"You couldn't have realized any of that before the battle?" Orange asked.

"What do you mean, natural Pokémon?" Violet inquired.

"Natural Pokémon are Pokémon that are actually real, such as Charmander, Spearow, and Weezing, that sort of thing," the man explained. "Team Debug's goal is to ensure that natural Pokémon take back the Tanko region from the clutches of Glitch Pokémon."

"What are Glitch Pokémon, then?" asked Red.

"Abnormal beings posing as Pokémon," the man answered with a growl. "Usually square in shape with blocky markings. Stuff like 44Hy and Z4."

"Excuse me!" Orange exclaimed, now positively furious. "My first Pokémon happens to be a 44Hy!"

At this news, the man took a step forward in an alarming manner.

"Then you must act fast. Get rid of it and any other Glitch Pokémon you might have on you. Now, before it's too late! Mark my words, those abominations are no good!"

And with that, he wheeled around and stomped away.

"What a nutcase!" Orange exclaimed, still fuming. "44Hy is as natural as any other Pokémon."

"All due respect, I didn't see it as natural," Red chimed in. "In Kanto, I've never seen such Pokémon as the ones I've encountered here."

"I knew Team Debug and Team Error were dangerous weirdos," observed Violet, "but I didn't think they were extremists. Team Debug seems to want to wipe out entire races of Pokémon!"

"I won't deny it, Pokémon like Z4, .4, and 44Hy creep me out a little," Red stated, "But if you guys are fine with them, they can't be that bad.!"

"At least that guy didn't steal our Pokémon," Orange said as he checked his belt, confirming that both Poké Balls were still there.

"Yeah," Violet agreed as she mimicked this action, to discover that both Chompy and Flutters were still there.

"Yeah, cause they seem a lot like this gang back in Kanto- oh, no," Red murmured.

"What?" asked Violet as Red pulled a Poké Ball off his belt.

"One of my Poké Balls is missing!" Red exclaimed as he held out the one he had left, which opened up to reveal his Rattata.

"That crook stole your Charmander!" Orange exclaimed.

Without another word, the trio dashed off into the woods in the direction the Team Debug grunt had gone, Red pausing briefly to call Rattata back.

Red, Orange, and Violet made their way through scrambled trees, rocks, and fragments of brick, and just two minutes in, had caught up to the grunt. He was looking at a Poké Ball in his hand and smirking in a smug manner.

"Stop, thief!" Red exclaimed.

"Hmm?" the man replied as he turned around to face the trio. "Ah, it's you three again. I'll admit, you're lucky to have caught up to me. I was banking on you to fall back asleep after I left, and you wouldn't have noticed Charmander's absence until the morning."

"You horrible man!" growled Violet. "How dare you steal someone else's Pokémon?!"

"Well, I'm not likely to tell you three. You appear to be very much against our cause, you see," said the man smoothly. "If I were to divulge anything about the secret plans of Team Debug, you're likely to just run off to the authorities. All I will say is that Charmander, as a Fire-type, is essential to our current plan."

"Just use your own Fire-type, then!" Red snarled. "Why steal one when you can catch one the legitimate way?"

"Because Poké Balls cost money, and my salary is pitiful," snapped the man. "Now I'll make you a deal. You three come with me and promise to keep quiet about anything you see, and I will give Charmander right back when we're done."

The three exchanged wary, suspicious glances. Orange shook his head and inconspicuously pointed at one of his Poké Balls and mouthed "44Hy". Red got the idea and winked. They then turned back to face the grunt.

"No deal," Red stated. "Give Charmander back now or else."

"Or else what?" sneered the grunt.

"Or else this!" shouted Orange as he took the Poké Ball off his belt and launched it into the air. "44Hy, hold him with Disable!"

In a flash of light, 44Hy materialized. Instantly, a pink aura came over its body, and the grunt suddenly found himself immobile, though his eyes bugged out in fear as he saw his assailant.

"I'll be taking that back, thanks," Red smirked as he swiped Charmander's Poké Ball out of the crook's hand.

"Let him go, now, 44Hy," said Orange.

"Hyyy," replied 44Hy as the pink aura vanished.

As soon as the grunt realized he was now able to move, he staggered backwards, cleared his throat, took a deep breath, and screamed,

"HEY! THERE'S A GLITCH OVER HERE! ATTACK NOW!!!!"

With a great rustling of leaves and roof tiles, five Team Debug grunts leapt down out of the surrounding trees, and stood in a circle, surrounding the trio. Each one of them held a Poké Ball.

"Not good," muttered Orange.

"GO!" exclaimed the five grunts simultaneously as they launched their Poké Balls. As the spheres split open, blinding light surrounded the trio. As it faded, Red observed the presence of five different Pokémon. One had a small, round body with lithe arms and legs and a long, skinny tail. A snout could be seen just beneath its eyes, which were narrowed in perpetual anger. Another one had a dark blue body with thin legs that had no feet, and it stayed airborne by constantly flapping its wings, which were purple on the inside. Though its mouth was constantly open, baring its sharp fangs, it had no eyes. The third was a Rattata. One looked like an oversized Poké Ball with angry eyes and no button. The final one, fishlike in shape, flopped about on the ground. Its body was coated in crimson scales, though its fins were yellow. Red, Orange, and Violet all took out their Pokédexes and pointed them at their opponents.

"Mankey, the Pig Monkey Pokémon," said Red's Pokédex. "Mankey is normally docile, but will become angry at the slightest provocation. You will not like Mankey when Mankey is angry. Zubat, the Bat Pokémon. A common sight in caves, Zubat unleashes soundwaves to locate its opponents. Overexposure to sunlight is unhealthy for it."

"Voltorb, the Ball Pokémon," stated Orange's Pokédex. "Voltorb's uncanny resemblance to a Poké Ball is unexplained. When angered, it will explode."

"Magikarp, the Fish Pokémon," chimed in Violet's Pokédex. "Though highly energetic, Magikarp is exceedingly weak. It is best known for its signature attack, Splash, which is completely useless."

"Pokémon League rules state that only one Pokémon can be used at a time!" exclaimed Orange.

"Orange, you're an idiot," snapped Violet. "You really think a bunch of crooks are going to care about league regulations? Chompy, Flutters, go!" she added as she threw both of her Poké Balls.

"Yeah, you too, .4!" Orange exclaimed as he tossed his remaining Poké Ball.

"I choose you, Rattata!" Red called as he launched a Poké Ball into the air.

Five more flashes of light, and Chompy the Bellsprout, Flutters the Metapod, .4, and Rattata materialized. 44Hy floated next to its teammates, ready for battle. All at once, everyone except the first grunt began shouting orders at their Pokémon.

"Mankey, hit Rattata with Low Kick!" growled a grunt.

"Dodge it and use Quick Attack!" Red shouted.

"Voltorb, use Tackle on the Metapod!"

"Flutters, Harden attack!"

"Rattata, use Water Gun on .4!"

".4, TM05!"

"Zubat, Leech Life on Bellsprout!"

"Chompy, Vine Whip!"

"Magikarp, Splash attack!"

"44Hy, Confusion!"

Mankey lunged forward foot-first and attempted to trip Red's Rattata, who darted out of the attack's path and plowed into Mankey's side, knocking it down. Voltorb rolled forward at a high speed, but Flutters's body took on a green glow and the attack appeared to have no effect. Rattata unleashed a stream of water from its mouth, but .4 vanished into thin air, and the attack missed completely. Zubat's fangs began glowing green as it swooped down on Chompy, who extended a pair of vines, succeeding at keeping the Bat Pokémon at bay. Magikarp flopped around in place to absolutely no effect whatsoever as 44Hy launched a ray of blue energy. Upon being hit by the attack, Magikarp fainted on the spot. As the grunt withdrew Magikarp, 44Hy turned to face the enemy's Rattata, and suddenly, two glowing orbs of bright white light formed above the Riverside Pokémon. The orbs shaped themselves to look like feet of some sort, and then launched themselves at the Rattata.

"What was that?!" exclaimed Violet as the Rattata fell over, unconscious.

"I think 44Hy learned how to use Double Kick!" Orange exclaimed. "44Hy, now use Double Kick on Voltorb!"

"Hyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!" shrieked 44Hy as it rose high into the air and began to glow. Orange's eyes brimmed with tears of joy as the luminous cube grew in size until it was nearly twice as large as before. The glow then faded.

44Hy was gone; in its place, the black-and-yellow form of the Pokémon Red had seen on his Pokédex back in the Ivadirin City Pokémon Center. Orange triumphantly held his Pokédex up, pointing it right at his newly-evolved Pokémon.

"Q, the Deep Sea Pokémon, and the evolved form of 44Hy," stated the Pokédex. "When it starts to use its immense Psychic powers, its entire body lights up. It can dive underwater to great depths."

"Kyuuuuuuuuuu," called out Q in a soft, high-pitched, melodious voice.

"Ugh!" exclaimed one of the Team Debug grunts, a nauseated expression on his face as he stared at the newly evolved Deep Sea Pokémon. "It's hideous!"

"What?!" snarled Orange, a look of fury on his face. "How dare you!? Q, take out the rest of these Pokémon with Confusion!"

"Kyuuuuuuuuuuuuuu," replied Q as it fired off three rays of blue psychic energy from various points on its body. The rays struck Voltorb, Zubat, and Mankey, but only the latter two fainted. Voltorb, though badly hurt, was obviously still conscious.

"Voltorb, Voltorb," droned Voltorb in a mechanical voice as its body slowly began to emit yellow light.

"Is it evolving?" asked Orange.

"I don't think so," Red answered. "We ought to back up a bit."

"No. Voltorb, NO!" screamed the grunt as Voltorb's glowing body began to let loose a thin stream of black smoke- and then exploded violently and suddenly, throwing up a massive cloud of dust.

Once the dust cleared, it became clear that nobody was actually hurt by the attack- though Voltorb managed to knock itself out. But Chompy, Flutters, Red's Rattata, and Orange's .4 and Q were all unharmed.

"Damn it, Will!" snapped the grunt who owned the Mankey, violently addressing the Tangela-owning grunt. "This is all your fault!"

"What?!" the grunt named Will exclaimed, now all fired up. "How do you figure that?"

"If you hadn't taken your sweet old time swiping that Charmander, we could've started that fire by now and gotten rid of all the Z4!"

"What?" Orange, Red, and Violet said simultaneously, their voices thick with incredulity. Will and the other grunt jumped, having momentarily forgotten that the trio hadn't left. Will then slapped the other grunt in the face.

"You idiot!" Will exclaimed. "What are you doing, revealing our plan to these twerps?!"

"Ease up, I didn't tell them everything!" the other grunt shouted defensively.

"You just told them that we were gonna set Ivadirin Forest on fire and kill all the Z4!"

"...Oh. I guess I did tell them everything, then, didn't I?" the grunt muttered sheepishly. Will facepalmed.

"You horrible people!" Violet exclaimed, her eyes wide with shock and rage. "You do realize that a fire would've killed everything in this forest, including all the Caterpie and Metapod, the Weedle and Kakuna, and us?!"

"Look, we didn't make the decisions here," Will stated. "We just got our orders from the boss, and we're just carrying them out as planned. And you weren't exactly supposed to find out about them, were they, Lou?"

"Your boss's orders included arson and murder?" replied Red.

"He said there might be some casualties, but as long as we killed every single Z4 in the forest it would all be worth it," said Lou. "Now, if it's all the same to you, we'll be getting back to headquarters and-"

"Shut up!" snapped Will as he slapped Lou's face.

"Ow! What?!" exclaimed Lou.

"Don't give me that, you were about to say just where headquarters is located!"

"No, I most certainly... Uh... Oh. Wow, I guess I was," chuckled Lou sheepishly. Will facepalmed again.

"I don't think you'll be going anywhere," sneered Violet. "Flutters, hit 'em with String Shot!"

"Not so fast!" exclaimed one of the other grunts as he threw something small and dark to the ground. Whatever it was, upon impact with the ground it let loose a blast of black smoke that cleared away as quickly as it came. Flutters let loose String Shot, but it merely hit a combination rock/tree/concrete structure some five yards away; the grunts had vanished.

"Well, damn," sighed Red after a few moments' silence. "So what now?"

"What now?" repeated Orange. "Night or not, we get the hell out of here right now!"

"What about our sleeping bags and backpacks, though?" Violet wondered out loud. "We left them back at the campsite."

"Kyuuu," replied Q; the trio wheeled around to face Q, and saw that it was psychically levitating three sleeping bags and three backpacks around it.

"Still freaks me out a bit," grinned Red as he took his sleeping bag and backpack. "But I think I'm really starting to like Q."

"That's what I like to hear, Red," Orange grinned back as he took his own backpack and sleeping bag.

A minute later, Red, Orange, and Violet had stuffed their sleeping bags into their backpacks, put the backpacks on their backs, and withdrew their Pokémon. Then, all of them trying and failing to stifle large yawns, they set off into the depths of the Ivadirin Forest.

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End of Chapter 5.

TheDarkDragons
27th April 2012, 4:33 AM
Okay, time to start. So Team Debug wants to destroy all glitch Pokemon, and Team Error wants to destroy all natural Pokemon. How will Red and Co. handle fightng TWO rival teams. In RSE, you just had to call upon on Pokemon to solve it all. But how could that happen here... Missingno. or Mew (or both?)? A Ratatta with Water Gun. That's the Gen 1 TM, right? What is the downside to Q again? Seems pretty fine to me. Good job on seting up the grunts' characters. Stupid to the point of beating each other up, and willing to destroy anything for their bosses need. Also, with the Rotom thing, I wanted to know what you thought, liking glitch Pokemon and all. Also, will any other kind of Glitches appear with 1st Pokemon, such as the Transform glitch with Ditto?

President People
27th April 2012, 4:58 AM
Ah, a new chapter at last! The plot thickens… Very interested to see what Team Glitch will be like, and what will be needed to defeat both teams. Can't wait for more glitch Pokémon to be introduced.

Small error…

"I won't deny it, Pokémon like Z4, .4, and 44Hy creep me out a little," Red stated, "But if you guys are fine with them, they can't be that bad.!"

A little undecided on punctuation here? :P


Keep the great chapters coming! I hope they continue to be released smoothly. :)

Knightfall
27th April 2012, 11:25 AM
My New Years Resolution still stands, here I am with another review!

Team Debug, hmmmm, all they want to do is restore Tanko. As they say, the road to hell is paved with good intentions. This is interesting.
And now the only Team we haven't met yet is Team Error, let's hope they'll be a little less radical when dealing with the so called "Natural Pokemon".

In other news, 44hy evolved, good for Orange. Can't wait to see who's Pokemon will evolve next, Red or Violet's.

Great chapter, introduced some tension with the Team Debug grunts, and 44hy's evolution.

Cant' wait to see more,

Knightfall signing off...;005;

Son_of_Shadows
27th April 2012, 7:12 PM
such as Charmander, Spearow, and Weezing, that sort of thing

Wouldn't be a MissingnoMaster fic without a Weezing reference or three.

3D992
27th April 2012, 8:25 PM
Noooooo! Dont die glitchies! I hope team error wont try and kill the normal pokemon!

Z-nogyroP
28th April 2012, 1:20 PM
IMO, best chapter so far. I get now why they're called Debug and Error. In other news, yay! 44hy evolved into Q! I was hoping there would be some middle form too, though, something like ????????????. But still, happy for Orange, and I'm rooting for Charmander to evolve next(go Charmeleon!)

rangernumber-x
28th April 2012, 1:42 PM
Great chapter. It shows that Tanko isn't that different, as in there teams are always going to have 'that guy' in the group, that can't wait to tell all of the 'top secret' plans to trainers that could easily beat their whole team. Anyway, great to see a evolution already, even before seeing the first gym. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and what you've done with Brock.

PerseusRad
28th April 2012, 2:55 PM
Great chapter as always. What will happen with Q's "special" powers? You know what I mean. >:]

Missingno. Master
28th April 2012, 10:23 PM
Okay, time to start. So Team Debug wants to destroy all glitch Pokemon, and Team Error wants to destroy all natural Pokemon. How will Red and Co. handle fightng TWO rival teams. In RSE, you just had to call upon on Pokemon to solve it all. But how could that happen here... Missingno. or Mew (or both?)?
You'll see eventually.


A Ratatta with Water Gun. That's the Gen 1 TM, right?
That and Will's Tangela knowing Skull Bash.


What is the downside to Q again? Seems pretty fine to me.
No downside. For now, anyway.


Also, will any other kind of Glitches appear with 1st Pokemon, such as the Transform glitch with Ditto?
I haven't ruled it out. In that specific instance, it's really just a question of finding the right time, place, and method to implement it.


Ah, a new chapter at last! The plot thickens… Very interested to see what Team Glitch will be like, and what will be needed to defeat both teams. Can't wait for more glitch Pokémon to be introduced.
It will actually take a while for more Glitch Pokémon to be introduced. Not until after Rewept Gym.


A little undecided on punctuation here? :P
Ooh, yeah, I probably ought to fix that. Thanks for catching that.


Keep the great chapters coming! I hope they continue to be released smoothly. :)
Thanks! I hope so too.


My New Years Resolution still stands, here I am with another review!
Good. Good.


Team Debug, hmmmm, all they want to do is restore Tanko. As they say, the road to hell is paved with good intentions. This is interesting.
I think so. :)


And now the only Team we haven't met yet is Team Error, let's hope they'll be a little less radical when dealing with the so called "Natural Pokemon".
I wouldn't get my hopes up if I were you.


In other news, 44hy evolved, good for Orange. Can't wait to see who's Pokemon will evolve next, Red or Violet's.
Most likely to be Flutters, though I haven't ruled out Charmander evolving first.


Great chapter, introduced some tension with the Team Debug grunts, and 44hy's evolution.

Cant' wait to see more,

Knightfall signing off...;005;
Thanks!


Wouldn't be a MissingnoMaster fic without a Weezing reference or three.
Heh. I couldn't resist.


Noooooo! Dont die glitchies! I hope team error wont try and kill the normal pokemon!
I can't promise they won't try. Whether they succeed is a whole other swarm of Yanma.


IMO, best chapter so far. I get now why they're called Debug and Error. In other news, yay! 44hy evolved into Q! I was hoping there would be some middle form too, though, something like ????????????. But still, happy for Orange, and I'm rooting for Charmander to evolve next(go Charmeleon!)
No, no middle form. As for the next evolution, its going to be either Charmander or Flutters. Haven't yet decided.


Great chapter. It shows that Tanko isn't that different, as in there teams are always going to have 'that guy' in the group, that can't wait to tell all of the 'top secret' plans to trainers that could easily beat their whole team. Anyway, great to see a evolution already, even before seeing the first gym. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and what you've done with Brock.
Maybe it's just me, but it looks as though you phrased it to seem like 44Hy's was the first evolution in the series. Not so, as Flutters became a Metapod in the previous chapter. Also, we will be seeing more of Will and Lou as time goes on.


Great chapter as always. What will happen with Q's "special" powers? You know what I mean. >:]
Oh, I know what you mean. I've been wondering how I might implement those, or even if I will. I won't say any more at the moment, but I have not ruled it out.

3D992
29th April 2012, 3:20 AM
Charmander-Charmeleon! Not flutters!

Treecko's Awesomeness
29th April 2012, 11:58 PM
Okay, I've been watching this fic for a while, but I haven't reviewed yet. Anyway, I just wanted to say that this fic is awesome! I might even like it better than the Adventureness series. Your characters are believable and likable, and I think you might be the only writer on Serebii who could make the gen 1 glitches merge with the games' reality so seamlessly. The plot seems to be developing really well, and I can't wait to see what you have in store.

Like I said, the characters you've created are great. They each have distinct personalities, and I really do get a sense of their character when reading them. I especially like how you've shaped their teams to match their personalities. I'd like to be more helpful here, but there's really not much I can say that could make this any better.

The only thing better than your characters is the way you write the glitches. I tried to write a glitch Pokemon once (the story isn't posted here) and it was garbage. It didn't fit in with the rest of the world, but you manage to do it without many problems. The only thing I would suggest changing is the portrayal of tile glitches. You make it fairly obvious that they're there, but they never seem to have a major effect on anything. Maybe having a character fall into a random patch of ocean, or have some Pokemon hiding in a patch of tall grass on somebody's roof, or have the cast chow down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. You get the idea.

The plot is awesome, too, like I said. I can't wait to read more about Red, Orange, and Violets' journey through Tanko and their fight against Teams Error and Debug.

Oh, and I'm going to guess that Missingno. is a legendary. Horay for fan speculation with no basis in fact!

-;201-t;;201-a;

EDIT: Oh, I almost forgot. Can I be on the PM list?

Z-nogyroP
30th April 2012, 1:01 AM
Oh, and I'm going to guess that Missingno. is a legendary. Horay for fan speculation with no basis in fact!

I was thinking the exact same thing!

Missingno. Master
30th April 2012, 1:36 AM
Charmander-Charmeleon! Not flutters!
Like I said, it's a possibility that Charmander will be the next to evolve. I haven't actually decided yet.


Okay, I've been watching this fic for a while, but I haven't reviewed yet. Anyway, I just wanted to say that this fic is awesome! I might even like it better than the Adventureness series. Your characters are believable and likable, and I think you might be the only writer on Serebii who could make the gen 1 glitches merge with the games' reality so seamlessly. The plot seems to be developing really well, and I can't wait to see what you have in store.

Like I said, the characters you've created are great. They each have distinct personalities, and I really do get a sense of their character when reading them. I especially like how you've shaped their teams to match their personalities. I'd like to be more helpful here, but there's really not much I can say that could make this any better.

The only thing better than your characters is the way you write the glitches. I tried to write a glitch Pokemon once (the story isn't posted here) and it was garbage. It didn't fit in with the rest of the world, but you manage to do it without many problems.
Thanks, you flatter me. :)


The only thing I would suggest changing is the portrayal of tile glitches. You make it fairly obvious that they're there, but they never seem to have a major effect on anything. Maybe having a character fall into a random patch of ocean, or have some Pokemon hiding in a patch of tall grass on somebody's roof, or have the cast chow down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. You get the idea.
I see what you're saying. I did intend to introduce the notion that the tile glitches would actually have some sort of effect within the next couple of chapters anyway, but I like that last part about chowing down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. I just might do something with that.


Oh, and I'm going to guess that Missingno. is a legendary. Horay for fan speculation with no basis in fact!
There will be at least one Glitch Pokémon that will be considered to be a legendary. Whether or not it is Missingno., I won't say just yet.


EDIT: Oh, I almost forgot. Can I be on the PM list?
Sure thing!

I haven't had an opportunity to get going on the next chapter yet. The final levels for Pokémon Tower Defense were completed this weekend, so that took up what little spare time I had. I'll be starting the next chapter soon, which will feature Rewept Gym, its leader, and a good, healthy dose of Pokémon battles! When it will be completed, however, I couldn't tell you at all right now.

Treecko's Awesomeness
30th April 2012, 2:35 AM
I see what you're saying. I did intend to introduce the notion that the tile glitches would actually have some sort of effect within the next couple of chapters anyway, but I like that last part about chowing down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. I just might do something with that.

Yay! I'm helping!

3D992
30th April 2012, 2:45 AM
Can I be on the pm list too?

Z-nogyroP
2nd May 2012, 1:43 AM
Oh, and me too?

ESPNfanatic35
2nd May 2012, 4:01 AM
Great stuff! The Team Debug and Team Error concepts are brilliant. You would think Team Debug would be considered good guys by the average gamer but nope, bad guys! I love it! Also loved seeing 44Hy kick some butt. Can't wait to see more!

TheDarkDragons
4th May 2012, 3:56 AM
WAIT!!! I just realized something.


Charmander held up its right arm and charged at Tangela. Upon reaching it, Charmander brought its arm down and scratched its vine-cloaked adversary. The attack appeared to have little effect, however.

"Tangela have high Defense," sneered the man as Charmander backed away. "You honestly expect a physical move to harm it that much? Pathetic! Tangela, finish it! Skull Bash now!"

"Tangela la!" Tangela replied as it leaned forward and charged right at Charmander.

"Ember!" Red called out desperately!



If this is the original Red, Green, and Blue, then wouldn't there be NO SAtk and SDef stats. And Attacks wouldn't be classified as Physical and Special too, because that started in FRLG and RSE. And, why is there an exclamation mark in the last sentence of above quote?

Missingno. Master
4th May 2012, 12:14 PM
Can I be on the pm list too?


Oh, and me too?

Sure thing, both of you!


WAIT!!! I just realized something.



If this is the original Red, Green, and Blue, then wouldn't there be NO SAtk and SDef stats. And Attacks wouldn't be classified as Physical and Special too, because that started in FRLG and RSE. And, why is there an exclamation mark in the last sentence of above quote?

There was always the concept of physical and special attacks, only back then, whether they were physical or special went by type. Special Attack and Special Defense were rolled into one stat, called Special. Scratch, as a Normal move, was always physical.

That last exclamation mark, on the other hand, was indeed an error. I'll fix that.

TheDarkDragons
5th May 2012, 3:45 AM
There was always the concept of physical and special attacks, only back then, whether they were physical or special went by type. Special Attack and Special Defense were rolled into one stat, called Special. Scratch, as a Normal move, was always physical.

That last exclamation mark, on the other hand, was indeed an error. I'll fix that.

Oops. I guess I wasn't looking hard enough at my Blue. And I did know that Physical and Special went by type, I just didn't think it had appeared until FRLG (cuz stupid Alakazam uses Calm Mind)

Z-nogyroP
6th May 2012, 3:22 PM
Something just occured to me, since this fic is all about glitches, will you put the Mew glitch? That would be hilarious!

Oh, and I changed my mind. Red's Rattata-Raticate all the way! Or Z4, if it evolves.

TheDarkDragons
8th May 2012, 7:27 PM
But none of the main characters have a Z4. Orange does have a .4, though. Speaking of which,why do all these glitch Pokemon have 4 in their name?

Missingno. Master
8th May 2012, 8:14 PM
Something just occured to me, since this fic is all about glitches, will you put the Mew glitch? That would be hilarious!
I'm definitely considering it. It's mainly a question of how exactly to implement it.


Oh, and I changed my mind. Red's Rattata-Raticate all the way! Or Z4, if it evolves.
Rattata will evolve, it just won't be the next one to do so. And no main characters have a Z4.


Speaking of which,why do all these glitch Pokemon have 4 in their name?
I have no idea, to be honest.

I know it's been a while since the last chapter. I do intend to get the next chapter out some time this month, but it's highly unlikely to be this week. Once my exams are done, things will likely pick up around here.

Z-nogyroP
8th May 2012, 10:33 PM
[QUOTE=Missingno. Master]And no main characters have a Z4.[QUOTE]

Wait, what? Did I misread something? I thought someone captured a Z4. I'm gonna go back to the previous chapter and check.

EDIT: Yup, you were right. I'm not sure why I thought someone would catch one, since Orange is afraid of Bug-types, Red doesn't like glitches(or at least catching them), and Violet already had Flutters.

Missingno. Master
22nd May 2012, 11:10 PM
Chapter 6: Challenge of Rewept Gym
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The trio dashed through the forest for a solid half hour before they finally broke free of the natural maze of oddly shaped trees. Barely registering the mass of buildings before them, they continued to run until Orange pointed out the Pokémon Center, distinguishable from the other oddly designed buildings only by the large sign over the entrance which read "Pokémon Center".

"Oh, my!" exclaimed the nurse as she approached Red, Orange, and Violet, who had all collapsed into the seats nearest to them while trying to catch their breath. "What on earth made you run in here like that in the middle of the night?"

"We..." gasped Orange. "Wanted... out of forest... quick as possible... Team Debug..."

"Ah," replied the nurse, a sudden frown on her face. "Say no more. What were they up to now?"

"Tried... to start... forest fire... stole Charmander... got it back..."

"They what?!" exclaimed the nurse, now looking shocked.

"They stole my Charmander to try and start a forest fire," Red explained, as he wasn't quite as out of breath as Orange. "We got it back, but they escaped."

"This is outrageous!" the nurse half-shouted. "I knew those nutcases wanted to eliminate all sorts of Pokémon, but setting the Ivadirin Forest on fire?! Every Pokémon in that forest would have died!"

She continued on in this vein for some time, pacing in circles and ranting about Team Debug. About three minutes in, Red, Orange, and Violet exchanged glances. Violet then cleared her throat, reminding the nurse of their presence.

"Er... nurse?" said Violet. "Could you maybe heal our Pokémon?"

"Oh- oh! Of course, I'm so sorry, it's just these Team Debug crooks have got me so worked up... of course, of course, right this way..."

Not five minutes later, the trio's teams were fully healed. As the nurse got the Rewept Police on the phone to inform them of Team Debug's arson attempt, the group made their way to the rooms in the back that the nurse allowed them to use for the night, flopped down on the beds, and fell asleep within seconds.
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When Red opened his eyes at 7:00 the next morning, his first thought was that an angry mob was attacking the center with chainsaws. Then he realized that the hideous, grating noises he was hearing were coming out of Orange's mouth; Orange was snoring extraordinarily loudly.

"Ugh... what the hell?" Red muttered, clearly at a loss as to how such noises could come out of one mouth. He then looked at Violet's bed; she was sound asleep. At that moment, however, Violet stirred, sat up, stretched, and pulled two small objects out of her ears. She then walked over to Orange's bed and nonchalantly slammed a pillow onto his head.

"Zzzz-hmm?! What?! Huh?!" exclaimed Orange as he woke up abruptly.

"You wear earplugs?" Red asked.

"Everyone in Talpel Town wears earplugs at night," Violet explained. "I'm guessing you figured out why."

"My snoring is not that loud," said Orange defensively.

"It sounded like about fifty chainsaws all going at once," Red said.

Choosing not to comment on this, Orange instead said, "We should probably get some breakfast, and then it's off to the Rewept Gym."

"I could eat, I guess," conceded Violet. With that, the trio walked out of the room and made their way to the Pokémon Center's cafeteria.

"What the...?" muttered Red as they all sat at a table and began to examine the menus. "Even number salad? Fried nine? What?"

"Oh, get the fried nine," Orange stated. "My mom makes that for breakfast sometimes and it is amazing."

"Um... I guess I'll give it a try," Red said uncertainly.

"Let me guess- numbers aren't generally on the menu in Kanto, are they?" asked Violet.

"No, not really," Red said quietly.

"Well, numbers make up most of what we eat in Tanko," Violet explained. "Each digit has its own sort of distinct flavor. Why don't you order the even number salad? That way you could try a nice variety of numbers, see what you like best?"

"Yeah, and I'll let you try my fried nines," added Orange.

"Thanks," Red smiled.

Just then, the three were approached by a large, pink, egg-shaped Pokémon with a real, white egg in a pouch on its stomach. It held a pad of paper and a pen in its short, stubby arms. Instinctively, Violet took out her Pokédex.

"Chansey, the Egg Pokémon," said the Pokédex. "Very rare and elusive. It will share its nutritious eggs with any injured Pokémon it meets."

"Chansey," the Chansey said, looking expectantly at the trio.

"Are you here to take our orders?" asked Red. Chansey nodded.

"OK, I'll have an order of fried nines with a glass of the fresh-squeezed four juice," Orange said.

"I'll have whole wheat zero toast with six jelly," Violet said.

"I'll have the even number salad," Red said.

"Chansey, Chansey!" exclaimed Chansey as she scribbled something down on the pad of paper she was holding, then walked away.

"So how are we gonna do this, anyway, challenging the Gym Leader?" asked Red. "I don't suppose they'd let us all battle the Gym Leader at the same time?"

At this, Orange burst out into laughter. Violet shot him a nasty glare, which went unnoticed by Orange for several minutes. Once Orange saw Violet glaring at him, he quieted down somewhat.

"Heh... And what, the Gym Leader would use three Pokémon at once, and each of us would only use one?" he chuckled.

Red shrugged. "Just an idea."

"It's against Pokémon League regulations for a trainer to use more than one Pokémon simultaneously in an official battle," Violet said. "I doubt any Gym Leader would go against that. We'll probably have our matches one right after the other. My mom told me that Gym Leaders have instant healing machines like Pokémon Centers do, so they can take on large amounts of challengers in a short period of time."

"What type does the Rewept Gym Leader specialize in anyway?" asked Red.

"I think I heard that Rewept Gym's specialty is Rock-types," answered Violet. "Nothing Chompy can't handle."

"Q and I are ready to rock!" added Orange, now grinning widely. "According to my Pokédex, Q's learned Water Gun since it evolved!"

Red, however, looked thoroughly downcast.

"What's up?" asked Violet.

"I thought you were supposed to be the smart one?" Orange said. "It's obvious Red's realized his team doesn't stand a chance against Rock-types. Rattata and Charmander, that's not exactly-" At that point, however, Orange fell silent as Violet gave him yet another glare; Orange's words had very clearly done nothing to improve Red's mood.

"It's not hopeless, Red," Violet said patiently. "Remember one of those Debug Grunts had a Rattata that could use Water Gun? Maybe if you teach your Rattata the move, you'll have an easier time in the gym."

"How would I do that, though?" asked Red.

"Easiest way would be to use a TM," said Violet. "You know what TMs are?"

"Yeah," said Red. "Technical Machines. They're little disc-like things that can teach new moves to Pokémon. There's one for Water Gun?"

"I think so."

"Where are we gonna get one, though?" Orange asked. "TMs are kinda rare."

"Damn," sighed Red.

"There's another way," said Violet. "Red, you could have Rattata train with Q a little bit. If a Pokémon watches a move it can learn being used by another Pokémon, it can learn the move that way."

Red didn't answer for a moment, apparently considering this. At that moment, however, Chansey approached their table, carrying three large platters and placing them in front of the trio. Orange's plate contained what appeared to be large, dark brown number nines, looking as though they had been carved out of thick pieces of wood, along with a tall glass full of a bright orange liquid. Violet's plate contained what appeared to be a bagel sliced in half, though with a larger hole, each half coated in an odd blue jelly. Red was given a bowl containing multicolored twos, fours, sixes, and eights. He took small bites of each number, and found that Violet was right- each one had its own unique flavor. The twos tasted like carrots, the fours tasted like oranges, the sixes tasted like blueberries, and the eights tasted like ketchup.

"Hey, the sixes and eights aren't bad!" Red observed. "I'm not that fond of the twos or the fours, though."

"Mmmm," sighed Orange as he took a large bite out of a nine. "Red, you gotta try these."

Red speared a nine on his fork and took a bite of it. His eyes widened as the delicious taste of bacon filled his mouth. "Holy crap, this is good!" Red exclaimed.

"Huh? Huh? What did I tell you?" grinned Orange.

Once everybody had finished eating (many of the twos and fours of Red's salad remained untouched), Chansey came back over with a large scanner-esque device. She held the device over their Pokédexes, and then walked away.

"What was that about?" asked Red.

"Chansey was verifying that we're Pokémon trainers," explained Violet. "All Pokémon Centers allow trainers to use their services for free, didn't you know?"

"Oh, yeah," murmured Red as they got up out of their seats and walked towards the exit. "I think Professor Oak mentioned something like that, now that I think of it..."

Once they were out of the center, Orange took out a Poké Ball and enlarged it. Taking the cue, Red did the same. They both then tossed the spheres into the air simultaneously, and let Q and Rattata out into the open.

"OK, Rattata, we're gonna teach you the Water Gun attack," Red explained.

"Rattata?" replied Rattata questioningly. In answer, Q unleashed a stream of water from the center of one of the sides of its body, reducing a nearby boulder to gravel. Having observed this, Rattata took a deep breath, opened its mouth wide... and nothing.

The two repeated these motions for a whole hour. Red got excited at one point, claiming to have seen something fly from Rattata's mouth after one attempt; it turned out, however, to be spit. Once Rattata started to show signs of tiring, however, Red reluctantly called off the training session.

"Maybe it won't be as bad as I think it will," he said halfheartedly.

"Doubt it- OW!" exclaimed Orange as Violet stomped on his foot.
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"Well, here we are," said Violet as the trio approached a massive structure that appeared to have been built out of tree limbs (complete with leaves), walls of solid rock, sixes, fours, and ice cubes. "Rewept City Pokémon Gym."

"Let's do this!" Orange exclaimed as he ran up to the large hedges which turned out to be double doors, shoved them open, and dashed inside. Violet and Red hastened to follow.

The inside of the gym was dark as dark can be. There was absolutely no telling how big it was. This was quickly rectified, however, as many spotlights on the ceiling turned on simultaneously, revealing the interior to be positively massive- the room was very long and wide, with a high ceiling. A large, rectangular area in the center of the room was marked off, obviously to serve as the battlefield. On the opposite side, a teenage girl with long, dark brown hair sat, clad in a pair of blue jeans and a light brown t-shirt.

"Welcome to the Rewept City Pokémon Gym," the girl said in a voice that echoed all around the cavernous structure. "My name is Minerva, and I'm this city's Gym Leader. And who are you?"

"I'm Orange McPixel from Talpel Town," announced Orange.

"Violet Scramble, also from Talpel Town," added Violet.

"Red Vershunn, from Pal- er, Talpel Town," said Red. Violet and Orange blinked, but otherwise showed no surprise at Red's lie about his hometown.

"We've all come to challenge this gym," Violet explained.

"Very well," Minerva answered. "But I cannot take you all on at once, it would go against Pokémon League regulations. I'll battle you in the order in which you introduced yourselves. Orange, was it? You first."

"Fine by me," grinned Orange as he stepped into a small, painted rectangle just outside the battlefield boundaries- obviously the spot in which the trainer was to stand.

"Here are the rules," stated Minerva. "We are each allowed two Pokémon, and the match is over when all Pokémon on one side are unable to continue. I'm not allowed to switch my Pokémon unless one faints, but you can switch at your leisure. Understand?"

Orange nodded.

"Then we begin," grinned Minerva as she produced a Poké Ball and threw it. "Geodude, go!"

The ball split open, and in a flash of light, what appeared to be a large, levitating boulder with eyes, a mouth, and thick, rocky arms materialized. "Geodude," it grunted.

"A Geodude," remarked Orange as he took his Pokédex out and pointed it at this airborne adversary.

"Geodude, the Rock Pokémon," said the Pokédex. "Geodude are a common sight in fields and mountains. When at rest, they are easily mistaken for ordinary rocks, and subsequently tripped over or stepped on."

"Let's do this!" Orange exclaimed, heaving a Poké Ball into the arena. ".4, I choose you!"

In a flash of light, Orange's .4 appeared, squealing happily in a high pitched voice and zooming around in circles, eager to fight.

"Geodude! Tackle!" Minerva ordered.

".4, use TM05!" Orange called.

Both Geodude and .4 zoomed forward, headed for each other at high speeds. At the last second, however, .4 pulled up and turned invisible.

"Geo?!" Geodude exclaimed, looking around frantically, trying to see where its opponent had gone.

"Use TM28 now!" commanded Orange.

The air behind Geodude exploded, sending it tumbling to the ground. .4 reappeared and gave a shrill giggle.

"Dude..." growled Geodude as it rose back into the air.

"Geodude, use your Rock Throw attack!" commanded Minerva.

".4, Agility!" Orange shouted.

.4 flew in circles around Geodude with increasing rapidity. Rocks formed out of thin air in Geodude's hands, and though it threw them in every direction, it failed to strike .4. Then. .4 rose high into the air and caught fire!

"What the hell?!" exclaimed Orange. His Pokédex, however, spoke up.

"TM09, an attack of the IIIItoto-type. An immensely powerful technique that no Pokémon type is resistant to."

"Awesome!" Orange exclaimed as .4's flaming form slammed hard into Geodude, causing a catastrophic and fiery explosion, kicking up dirt and dust. Once the dust settled, however, both Geodude and .4 were laying on the ground, not moving at all.

"What?!" Orange exclaimed as both he and Minerva withdrew their Pokémon.

"While TM09 is powerful, it causes the user to faint," continued the Pokédex.

"I really could have used that information sooner!" snapped Orange as both he and Minerva threw new Poké Balls. "Q, let's go!"

"I choose you, Rhyhorn!" exclaimed Minerva.

The thrown balls split open, and each one poured out bright white light. Before Orange materialized the cube-shaped form of Q. Before Minerva stood a creature that looked to be made entirely of gray rock, standing on four stumpy legs.

"Rhyhorn, the Spikes Pokémon," said Orange's Pokédex. "Rhyhorn's bones are a thousand times harder than those of humans. Though not very bright, it is incredibly strong, and can demolish whole buildings just by charging into them."

"Alright, Q, Water Gun now!" Orange called.

"Use Horn Attack!" Minerva commanded.

Q unleashed a stream of water as Rhyhorn gave a loud roar and charged forward, its pointed horn aimed right at Q. Though it managed to muscle its way through the stream of water initially, the overwhelming type disadvantage became too much, and Rhyhorn collapsed to the floor. Down, but not out; it still attempted to climb back to its feet.

"Q, use your Confusion attack!" ordered Orange.

"Rhyhorn, Bide!" shouted Minerva.

Q launched a ray of blue light, while Rhyhorn's body took on a bright yellow glow. The Confusion met its mark, but Rhyhorn continued to glow. Then, Rhyhorn roared loudly, and launched a massive beam of yellow light right at Q, striking the Deep Sea Pokémon hard.

"Q!" exclaimed Orange. Fortunately, Q was still conscious; it floated in midair, albeit while wobbling dangerously.

"Never seen that attack before, have you?" smirked Minerva. "Bide allows a Pokémon to store energy from attacks it is hit with, and then it hits the opponent for twice that amount of damage. It's won me many battles against trainers who didn't see it coming."

"I got an idea," muttered Orange. "Q, use Disable!"

"What- no!" exclaimed Minerva. as Q's body took on a pink aura. The aura then spread to Rhyhorn's body.

"Not so confident now, are you?" sneered Orange. "It takes a little while for Disable to wear off, by which time this match will be over! Finish it, Q! Water Gun attack!"

Q gave its soft cry as it shot off another blast of water, striking Rhyhorn head on and causing it to collapse on its side. This time, Rhyhorn made no effort to move.

"Rhyhorn, return," sighed Minerva, holding out its Poké Ball as Orange did likewise with Q. Minerva then walked across the battlefield and approached Orange. "A fine battle, Orange. You've definitely earned this." And she held out her hand to Orange. In it was a small, gray object, which looked like a small cluster of gray circles. "It's the official Pokémon League Gravel Badge."

"Sweet!" Orange exclaimed as he swiped the badge from Minerva's hand, held it up, and gazed at it. Minerva then handed him what appeared to be a light gray CD. "What's this?" asked Orange.

"It's Technical Machine number 34," replied Minerva. "It'll teach Bide to a compatible Pokémon. Use it wisely. Violet, you're next, ready?"

"As I'll ever be," smiled Violet.

Minerva walked back over to her side of the battlefield, and placed her two Poké Balls in a small tray that protruded from the wall. She pressed a red button above the tray, and the Poké Balls quivered slightly. She then took them back off and reattached them to her belt.

"OK, now that my Pokémon are healed, let's get this started!" declared Minerva.

Violet took a Poké Ball, enlarged it, and threw it. "I choose you, Flutters!" called Violet.

In a flash of light, Flutters the Metapod materialized. Minerva blinked in surprise. "A Metapod?" she asked dubiously. "Well, OK..." She then produced, enlarged, and tossed a Poké Ball of her own. "Let's go, Geodude!"

Minerva's Geodude re-emerged in a brilliant blast of white light. It floated in midair, staring down its mainly immobile opponent.

"Geodude, Rock Throw!" commanded Minerva.

"Flutters, Harden attack!" ordered Violet.

"Metapod," replied Flutters as its body took on a green glow. Geodude threw a pair of stones at Flutters, but they bounced off its body with loud clanging noises.

"Flutters, String Shot, go!" Violet shouted.

"Metapod, Metapod," droned Flutters as it fired a blast of sticky white silk from the pointy topmost point of its body. Geodude made to dive out of the way, but moved too soon- the attack had hit, and Geodude was covered in gooey string.

"Now, Flutters, return!" Violet called, as she held out the Poké Ball. Once the Metapod had been withdrawn, Violet threw the other ball. "Chompy, let's go!"

In a flash of light, Chompy the Bellsprout materialized. It stared at its close to immobile opponent and chuckled.

"Geodude, Tackle attack!" Minerva ordered.

"Chompy, dodge it and use Growth!" Violet exclaimed.

Geodude dove down at Chompy, but moved so slowly that the Bellsprout was able to sidestep the move with ease. As Geodude attempted to extricate itself from the ground, Chompy's body took on a green aura and doubled in size.

"Now, Vine Whip!" commanded Violet.

"Sproooout!" exclaimed Chompy as it produced a pair of thick green vines from behind its leaves and slammed them into Geodude, who subsequently abandoned its attempt to get back into the air and ceased all movement.

"I see, now," Red nodded. "She had Flutters slow Geodude down to give Chompy more time to set up Growth."

"Cool," remarked Orange.

"Geodude, return!" said Minerva as she held Geodude's Poké Ball in one hand and threw her other one with the other hand. "Rhyhorn, you're up!"

Rhyhorn reappeared in a flash of light and glared at the oversized Bellsprout, who glared right back.

"Chompy, let's win this! Vine Whip attack!" Violet ordered.

"Rhyhorn, Bide now!" Minerva shouted.

As Rhyhorn took on a yellow glow, Chompy dashed forward and slammed its vines into Rhyhorn's body repeatedly. Though the move was clearly taking its toll, Rhyhorn was still standing, holding its ground defiantly. Then came the massive beam of yellow light. Chompy was plowed backwards by the force of the close-range attack, and as it came to rest half-buried at Violet's feet, it shrank back down to its regular size.

"No! Chompy, NO!" exclaimed Violet, though her frantic shouts did nothing to change the fact that her Bellsprout- her best hope against a Rock-type- was unconscious.

"Didn't think it'd be that easy," remarked Minerva, smirking as Violet withdrew Chompy. "I will say this, though, that Bellsprout really gave Rhyhorn here a good fight."

"It's up to you, now," sighed Violet, addressing the Poké Ball now in her right hand. "I know it's not the best matchup, but the battle's not over until it's over. Flutters, go!"

Violet heaved the Poké Ball, from which re-emerged the solid and nearly immobile form of Flutters the Metapod. Rhyhorn gave a derisive snort upon spotting its opponent.

"Rhyhorn, Horn Attack!" ordered Minerva.

"Flutters, Harden!" called Violet.

"Metapod," replied the Metapod as its body took on a green glow. Rhyhorn's lowered its head as it charged, and plowed into Flutters, sending it flying into the air and out of the arena. Violet scrambled backwards and caught Flutters in her arms.

"Flutters, if you don't want to do this anymore, it's OK," Violet said quietly. "It's my fault, I didn't even think that Chompy wouldn't have been able to take out Rhyhorn."

"Pod..." Flutters said quietly before its body took on a brilliant white glow.

"Wha-Flutters?!" Violet exclaimed, holding her now-blinding Bug-type out at arm's length. Through the bright light, Red could vaguely make out Flutters changing shape. The evolving Metapod rose into the air, and a moment later, the glow stopped. Flutters was no longer a Metapod. What hovered before them now had a purple body with two small blue hands, a pair of large red eyes, and a pair of large, white wings with thin black lines forming simple designs.

"Freeeh, freeeh!" exclaimed the newly evolved Butterfree as it rose higher in the air, flying around in circles.

"Woah!" exclaimed Orange, who no longer seemed frightened of Flutters. "A Butterfree!" Red, equally in awe, held his Pokédex out.

"Butterfree, the Butterfly Pokémon, and the evolved form of Metapod," droned the Pokédex. "A water-repellant dust coats its wings, allowing it to fly even in the rain. Butterfree are capable of using such techniques as Confusion and Sleep Powder."

"Consider me impressed," Minerva smiled. "First time I've ever seen a challenger's Pokémon evolve mid-battle. OK, Rhyhorn, use your Thunderbolt attack!"

"Flutters, Sleep Powder!" exclaimed Violet.

"Freeeh, freeeh!" Flutters exclaimed as it flapped its wings and flew directly above Rhyhorn, scattering a fine blue dust. Rhyhorn growled as its body crackled with electricity, but this quickly gave way to rumbling snores to rival Orange's as it slumped to the ground.

"Finish it! Confusion attack!" Violet commanded.

"Wake up, Rhyhorn!" Minerva was screaming, but no use; Flutters unleashed twin beams of blue light from its eyes, striking Rhyhorn hard. The Spikes Pokémon rolled over three times and came to rest at Minerva's feet- though the Confusion had jolted it awake, it had knocked it out almost immediately afterwards.

"Well done," sighed Minerva as she withdrew Rhyhorn and approached Violet. Once Minerva reached the challenger's side of the arena, she handed another Gravel Badge and TM34 to Violet.

"Thanks," Violet grinned as she accepted the items.

"You earned them," smiled Minerva. "OK, Red, your turn. Are you ready?"

"...I guess," sighed Red. In truth, he didn't feel ready at all, given that none of his Pokémon had any sort of move that could be effective on a Rock-type.

"You know, you don't have to do this now, Red," Violet said kindly. "We can help you train-"

"Thanks, Violet, but... I want to at least give it a shot," said Red, giving a brave attempt at a smile. "I'm not always going to be at an advantage, so I might as well get some practice trying to win in spite of a disadvantage."

"Wow," Violet said as Minerva crossed back over to her side of the battlefield. "Well, good luck, Red!"

"Thanks," Red smiled as he turned to face Minerva.

"Yeah, we're behind you all the way, Red!" added Orange. He then leaned over and muttered to Violet, "He's screwed, isn't he?"

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End of Chapter 6.

Rotomknight
22nd May 2012, 11:36 PM
EEEEEEEEEVIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great. I like your nod to your A of A.
Watch Red's Carmander evolve mid-fight, learn metal claw, and ace it.

Missingno. Master
22nd May 2012, 11:44 PM
EEEEEEEEEVIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great. I like your nod to your A of A.
Watch Red's Carmander evolve mid-fight, learn metal claw, and ace it.

This fic's mechanics are based on Generation I. Special stat, Wrap is actually worth using, Magnemite is pure Electric, et cetera. Metal Claw didn't exist until Generation II, and Charmander didn't become able to learn it until the middle of Generation III.

Jonah the Slaking
22nd May 2012, 11:51 PM
EEEEEEEEEVIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great. I like your nod to your A of A.
Watch Red's Carmander evolve mid-fight, learn metal claw, and ace it.

First gen. Metal Claw didn't exist.

Anyway, great new chapter! I want to go eat a fried 9 now! In fact, I think I will!

9

...It's just not the same.

Treecko's Awesomeness
23rd May 2012, 3:03 AM
*dun dun dun dun!*

Treecko's Awesomeness got an idea cameo!

Anyway, I love it. The gym battle was great, as was the evolution. I just have two suggestions.

First, get out of your habit of describing a Pokemon coming out of a Pokeball as a "flash of light". Unless, of course, that was an intentional shout out to AOA. There are plenty of other ways to describe it, and you don't even have to describe it at all.

Second, it's not a bad thing to say "said". "He grunted", "she commanded", "he exclaimed", etc., are awkward to read. "Said" flows right into the story naturally, and keeps the pace fast. And never, ever, EVER use something like "he grinned" to follow dialogue. If you can grin a sentence, I'd be happy to see/hear it, but until then, you say words. Not grin them.

Knightfall
23rd May 2012, 3:38 AM
Here I am at last. Had a bit of schoolwork to finish, but it's done now. So, let's get started.


"Heh... And what, the Gym Leader would use three Pokémon at once, and each of us would only use one?" he chuckled.

Yeah, who would do that I wonder? ;)

Minevra, creative name. She appears to be a good battler, wonder if Red can pull off a victroy at his type disadvantage.
If a certain orange fire lizard evolved in the middle of the battle into a certain crimson fire lizard I happen to like, than that might be favorable to a certain trainer named after a primary color.

I honestly can't wait to see Red's battle next chapter, it should be interesting.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

P.S: I got my name changed. It's now Knightfall with a capital "K". I don't know if that matters too much, but you did say to tell you if we got a name change....

Missingno. Master
23rd May 2012, 3:26 PM
First, get out of your habit of describing a Pokemon coming out of a Pokeball as a "flash of light". Unless, of course, that was an intentional shout out to AOA. There are plenty of other ways to describe it, and you don't even have to describe it at all.

Second, it's not a bad thing to say "said". "He grunted", "she commanded", "he exclaimed", etc., are awkward to read. "Said" flows right into the story naturally, and keeps the pace fast. And never, ever, EVER use something like "he grinned" to follow dialogue. If you can grin a sentence, I'd be happy to see/hear it, but until then, you say words. Not grin them.
Both of those are things I've been trying to work on, though obviously not with much success. As for not following dialogue with "he grinned" and such, that's actually a good point, I'll remember that.



Minevra, creative name. She appears to be a good battler, wonder if Red can pull off a victroy at his type disadvantage.
If a certain orange fire lizard evolved in the middle of the battle into a certain crimson fire lizard I happen to like, than that might be favorable to a certain trainer named after a primary color.

I honestly can't wait to see Red's battle next chapter, it should be interesting.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

P.S: I got my name changed. It's now Knightfall with a capital "K". I don't know if that matters too much, but you did say to tell you if we got a name change....

I'm gonna take a wild shot in the dark of a guess and suppose that you just might possibly want Red's Charmander to evolve in the next chapter. I'll be honest, it's a possibility I'm considering. I have several ideas for Red's battle. I know how you feel, too- there was a time when Charmeleon was my favorite Pokémon, years and years ago. Red's Charmander will evolve, definitely, and soon. That's all I can say at the moment.

Next chapter won't be for some time, possibly not until after I get out the next special chapter of The Adventure of Adventureness.

Osha Say What?
25th May 2012, 3:16 AM
Dang, the Retwep Gym leader is a chick. Didn't see that coming. I can't wait to see what you do for the other Gym Leaders.

UltimatePokemonExpert
25th May 2012, 4:52 AM
Great chapter. I only have one complaint, the whole metapod evolution thing was kinda expected if you know what I mean. It was pretty mary sue if you ask me. But Is till enjoyed your chapter. Can't wait for a charizard....soon.

ESPNfanatic35
25th May 2012, 9:37 PM
This is another well-written and very funny chapter. Really love the idea of having numbers as food. Maybe they could have sprinkled a dash of decimals on their salads? lol. And Orange really does have to do something about that horrid snoring. I loved the fight scenes as well as the development the characters and Pokemon are getting. Can't wait to see how Red fares with the type disadvantage in his gym battke.

Z-nogyroP
25th May 2012, 10:47 PM
Sweet! New chapter!

*5 minutes of absolutely mind-blowing awesomeness later*

Sorry, got hungry. I just finished my fried 9. Anyway, can't wait for the gym battle! I'm betting on Rattata learning Water Gun during the battle, or Charmander learning Submission. Or Dragon Rage!
To you, Missingno. Master, I award thee the golden fried nine!

9

Don't you love it?

The Oncoming Storm
27th May 2012, 10:25 AM
Well mm it has taken a while to actually post my response for the new chapter b7t all I can say is damn. Great work. I am engrossed in not only the comedy but also in the adventure and the strangeness of this new world. It is spectacular the way you have created this insane world simply from glitch city. Here's to the trip to reulneac.

Missingno. Master
30th May 2012, 3:30 AM
Dang, the Retwep Gym leader is a chick. Didn't see that coming. I can't wait to see what you do for the other Gym Leaders.
You didn't see that coming? I could've sworn I mentioned that each Gym Leader would be the opposite gender of their Kanto counterpart (though not a full-on transgender deal)...


Great chapter. I only have one complaint, the whole metapod evolution thing was kinda expected if you know what I mean. It was pretty mary sue if you ask me. But Is till enjoyed your chapter. Can't wait for a charizard....soon.
Yeah, I get what you mean. What I was going for was to draw something of a parallel with when Ash's Metapod evolved, as that scene still brings tears to my eyes.


This is another well-written and very funny chapter. Really love the idea of having numbers as food. Maybe they could have sprinkled a dash of decimals on their salads? lol. And Orange really does have to do something about that horrid snoring. I loved the fight scenes as well as the development the characters and Pokemon are getting. Can't wait to see how Red fares with the type disadvantage in his gym battke.
Oh, sure, Orange could do something about his horrid snoring, but then I'd miss out on an opportunity for a decent running gag. While this fic is more about plot than humor, I find it hard to pass up the opportunity to slip in at least one recurring gag.

As for how Red will fare with his Gym battle, you might not have too long to wait on that. I've been writing up part of the next chapter in my spare time, whenever I didn't spend it working on the next special chapter for The Adventure of Adventureness, and the Gym battle itself has been written, but as that's not the entire chapter in and of itself, you'll still have a bit of a wait, I'm afraid.


Sweet! New chapter!

*5 minutes of absolutely mind-blowing awesomeness later*

Sorry, got hungry. I just finished my fried 9. Anyway, can't wait for the gym battle! I'm betting on Rattata learning Water Gun during the battle, or Charmander learning Submission. Or Dragon Rage!
I will neither confirm nor deny the learning of any new moves during the next chapter. Not at this point, anyway.


To you, Missingno. Master, I award thee the golden fried nine!

9

Don't you love it?

Mmm, tastes like bacon. I looooove bacon.


Well mm it has taken a while to actually post my response for the new chapter b7t all I can say is damn. Great work. I am engrossed in not only the comedy but also in the adventure and the strangeness of this new world. It is spectacular the way you have created this insane world simply from glitch city. Here's to the trip to reulneac.

Ruceelna City, actually. Glad you like it!

As mentioned earlier, the next chapter is in the works. Probably won't be done before the end of the week, but you never know...

Missingno. Master
30th May 2012, 4:53 AM
...Like I said, you never know.


Chapter 7: Red's Rattata Run
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Red took several deep breaths to steady himself as he stared across the giant battlefield, though he knew that his Charmander and Rattata didn't really stand a chance against a Geodude and Rhyhorn. Across the arena, Minerva had finished healing her Pokémon, and so heaved her first Poké Ball onto the field. "Geodude, go!" she called out.

The ball split open, allowing the spherical floating boulder to materialize yet again. "Geodude," grunted Geodude.

"OK," Red said quietly to himself as he frantically racked his brain for possible strategies. When nothing that seemed likely to work came to him, he ceased this and instead simply took a Poké Ball off his belt, enlarged it, and tossed it onto the rocky field. "I choose you, Rattata!" called Red.

Rattata emerged onto the battlefield as soon as the Poké Ball opened up. It landed on the ground and faced Geodude defiantly, not seeming to care about its apparent disadvantage.

"Geodude, Tackle attack now!" Minerva called.

"Rattata, Tail Whip!" Red ordered.

As Geodude charged forward, Rattata wheeled around and wagged its tail. Bewildered at this pointless action, Geodude slowed down.

"Don't let your defense down, Geodude, that's what they're after!" Minerva warned. "Use Defense Curl!"

"Geodude," replied Geodude as it landed on the ground and folded its arms tightly, seeming to now form a perfect sphere.

"Use Quick Attack!" Red shouted.

"Rrrrrrrrrattata!" shrieked Rattata as it charged across the battlefield at blinding speeds and struck Geodude. Thought the Rock Pokémon obviously wasn't hurt that much by the attack, it remained unable to, in its current spherical state, stop itself from rolling backwards uncontrollably as a result of the impact. Geodude rolled back until it crashed into the back wall.

"Wow," Orange said. "That was pretty cool."

"I wasn't sure if that would work," said Red. "Nice job, Rattata."

"Rattata!" exclaimed Rattata happily.

"Come on, Geodude," encouraged Minerva as her Pokémon unsteadily rose back into the air, still apparently dizzy from its unexpected trip.

"Duuuude," groaned Geodude.

"Shake it off, Geodude, you've taken harder hits than that before. Show them your Mega Punch!"

"Rattata, return," Red said as he held out the Poké Ball. The red beam of light exploded forth from the Poké Ball's button, recalling Rattata before Geodude could even begin its attack. Red then threw another ball. "Charmander, let's go!" he shouted.

The Poké Ball split open in midair and spilled out a mass of shapeless white energy which quickly formed itself into Red's Fire-type. "Char, char!" it exclaimed.

"Geodude, Rock Throw!" Minerva called out.

"Charmander Growl!" Red ordered.

"Chaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaar!" Charmander shouted, its voice noticeably more grating than usual. Geodude held out its arms, but before the rocks could form, it was clapping its hands over what Red supposed were its ears, groaning in agony as Charmander continued the Growl attack.

"Smart move," Violet commented. "Growl lowers an opponent's attacking power."

"Now, Charmander, Ember!" Red commanded.

"Char char char!" Charmander responded as it wheeled around and wagged its tail as Rattata had done. Small flames flew off of its tail and struck Geodude, who had only begun to recover from the Growl attack.

"Mega Punch now!" Minerva called out.

"Dude!" Geodude shouted as it suddenly charged forward, its right fist connecting with Charmander's stomach, sending it flying backwards Charmander screamed as it landed on the ground in front of Red and began to unsteadily climb back to its feet.

"Charmander, take a rest," said Red as he held the ball out. Once Charmander had been withdrawn, Red threw his other Poké Ball. "Back out again, Rattata!"

"Rattata!" exclaimed Rattata upon being sent out again. Red then got a proper look at Geodude and noticed that parts of its rocky hide had been blackened.

"Yes!" Red exclaimed. "Charmander's Ember attack burned Geodude! Rattata, let's finish this! Use Quick Attack!"

"Ratta...TAAAA!" bellowed Rattata. Instead of charging forward, however, a stream of water issued from its gaping mouth, striking Geodude hard.

"WHAT?!" Minerva screamed. "How the..."

"I can't believe it!" Violet exclaimed. "The training worked after all! Red, Rattata's learned Water Gun!"

"Yes! YES!" cheered Red. "It's not over yet! Rattata, Water Gun once more!"

"Ratta... TAAAA!" repeated Rattata as it issued another jet of water.

"Quick, Geodude, Mega Punch now!" Minerva ordered, but too late; Rattata's Water Gun connected with the semiconscious Rock-type, and it fell to the floor with a loud crashing noise, where it made no effort to get back up.

"Geodude, return," scowled Minerva, clearly displeased that her Pokémon had been defeated by such a stroke of luck. "Not bad, Red, but you'll soon learn that luck can only get you so far. Rhyhorn, I choose you!"

Minerva yelled these last four words as she launched her second Poké Ball, unleashing her Rhyhorn into the fray.

"Rattata, Water Gun! Let's end it here and now!" Red called out.

"Rhyhorn, Bide!" Minerva shouted.

As Rhyhorn began to focus, Rattata fired off a continuous stream of water from its mouth.

"Don't give it a chance to launch Bide!" Red warned Rattata. "You keep that Water Gun going, Rattata! Soak that Rhyhorn until it faints!"

After many tense seconds of watching, Rhyhorn suddenly fired off a large yellow beam of energy, cutting through the continual Water Gun, and plowing Rattata halfway into the ground. As the Rat Pokémon struggled to climb back out, Minerva gave another command; "Finish it with Stomp!"

Rhyhorn dashed forwards at a high speed. Despite Red's frantic commands for more Water Gun usage, Rattata was too worn out to do much more than continue to pull itself out of the ground. Rhyhorn then reared up upon approaching Rattata and brought its right front foot down hard on it. As it backed off, a clearly unconscious Rattata could be seen.

"No... Rattata, return," Red sighed as he withdrew Rattata. "I can't believe I made the same mistake Violet did."

"I can't believe that Water Gun couldn't knock out Rhyhorn," Violet said.

"I can't believe it's not butter," said Orange. "What?" he added defensively as Violet glared at him.

"Well, this is it, then," Red said as he threw another Poké Ball. "Charmander, it's up to you!"

As Charmander reappeared, it was clear that though it had recovered somewhat, it had retained most of the damage dealt by Geodude's Mega Punch.

"Let's make this quick, Rhyhorn," said Minerva. "Horn Attack!"

"Charmander, Ember attack!" Red shouted.

Charmander wheeled around, wagging its tail and sending embers flying as Rhyhorn charged forward. The flames pelted its body, but it did not slow down. It collided with Charmander, horn-first, knocking it backwards.

"Charmander!" Red shouted as his Pokémon struggled to get back to its feet for the second time in one battle. This time, however, most of the attempt was obscured by the sudden appearance of a dazzling white glow around Charmander's entire body.

"Oh, come on!" Minerva exclaimed. "It was kinda cool when the Metapod did it, but now it's downright repetitive!"

Indeed, Charmander was evolving.

"Yes! YES!" Red exclaimed loudly, as he tried and failed to conceal a wide grin as the glow faded, revealing Charmander to have been replaced by a slightly taller creature. Though built similarly to Charmander, this Pokémon looked decidedly more powerful. Maybe it was what appeared to be a perpetual look of total confidence in its eyes, maybe it was the fact that its tail was thicker and longer, topped with a larger flame, maybe it was the fact that its formerly orange scales were now a bright crimson.

"Chaaaaaaaar!" roared the new Pokémon in a decidedly deeper voice.

"Oh, sweet! It evolved into a Charmeleon!" Orange breathed, holding out his Pokédex as Red did the same.

"Charmeleon, the Flame Pokémon, and the evolved form of Charmander," said both Pokédexes simultaneously. "Charmeleon is at its happiest when engaged in a tough fight. It attacks its foes mercilessly and will not stop until it has won."

Red then looked at his Pokédex- it was displaying a new move for Charmeleon. Still grinning, he and Charmeleon exchanged looks. Both of them were now very confident.

"Ready to win this, Charmeleon?" asked Red.

"Char," Charmeleon replied, nodding.

"Then let's give them a Flamethrower!" Red commanded. Charmeleon was more than happy to oblige as it unleashed from its mouth a massive stream of flames. Rhyhorn, on Minerva's frantic command, prepared to use Bide, but the move proved to be far too much for the Spikes Pokémon to handle. Charmeleon stopped the attack after a few moments, at which point the completely charred and blackened Rhyhorn tipped over and fell on its side with an earth-shaking crash, and moved no more.

"WE DID IT!" Red cheered loudly. "I won! We won! Come here, Charmeleon!"

As Red and Charmeleon hugged each other, Minerva sighed, wordlessly withdrew Rhyhorn, then approached Red.

"Well, even if it did seem a little too much like how Violet won," said Minerva, "the fact remains that you beat me, fair and square, Red." She then held out her hand, in which was contained a Gravel Badge and a TM34. Red accepted them gratefully.

"Thanks," he said as he withdrew Charmeleon. "I still can't believe we did it, though!"

"So where are you three headed next, anyway?" asked Minerva. "Going after all the badges?"

"That we are," said Red. "I don't suppose you'd happen to know where the nearest Gym is?"

"Well, there's the Ivadirin Gym, though I heard the leader's been absent for some time now," said Minerva. "There's a Gym in Ruceelna City, you might want to check that out. It's just on the other side of Moon Canyon.

"Moon Canyon?" repeated Red.

"Yeah," said Orange. "It's supposed to be this large canyon that supposedly started forming when a huge meteor from space crashed into the ground and split it in half."

"Correct," said Minerva.

As the trio exited the Gym and made for the Pokémon Center, Red spoke up again. "In Kanto, there's a city just east of Pewter City, called Cerulean City. I'm gonna go ahead and guess that Ruceelna is spelled R-U-C-E-E-L-N-A?

"Yeah, why- ohhhhhhh," said Orange. "Those letters when rearranged, spell Cerulean?"

"Yep," said Red.

"Still freaky," sighed Orange, shaking his head.

"What about Moon Canyon?" asked Violet. "Anything like that in Kanto?"

Red shook his head. "No canyons, but between Pewter City and Cerulean City, there's this huge mountain called Mt. Moon, which supposedly formed from a large meteor. I'm guessing Moon Canyon was named because the meteor that crashed was supposed to have been from the moon?"

"Bingo," said Orange. "According to rumor, the meteor broke into thousands of fragments- Moon Stones, which can be used to evolve various Pokémon."

"Those I know about," Red nodded. "Professor Oak told me about them. So, should we head out?"

"I'm thinking we should hit the Pokémon Center first, actually," said Violet. "Almost all of our Pokémon are kinda wiped out from the gym."

"Good point," conceded Red, who then proceeded to lead the way to the Pokémon Center, ignoring Orange's whining about how they were supposedly wasting valuable time. Orange continued in this vein as they entered the center, as the nurse healed their Pokémon, and as they exited.

"...and furthermore, going back to the Pokémon Center is gonna take so long, you know how crowded these places get at this time of the day, and-"

"ORANGE!" shouted Violet. "In case you haven't noticed, we just left the Pokémon Center. It took less than two minutes for that nice nurse to heal our Pokémon. And we most certainly have not wasted our entire day!"

"...oh," Orange replied lamely at length. "Well, it still could've gone that way easily."

"Orange?" said Violet.

"Yes?"

"Shut up."

Minutes later, they approached a road of roof tiles, drywall, and tree bark, flanked by what appeared to be large heaps of crushed ice, pencil shavings, and clumps of grass. According to a nearby sign, they were leaving Rewept City and approaching Route -3.

"Alright, let's try and catch more Pokémon!!" Orange exclaimed excitedly as he ran down the road, looking excitedly in all directions. Violet sighed and followed at a leisurely pace, followed by Red, who was warily eyeing a distant swarm of .4.

Before long, Orange screeched to a halt, as he spotted floating before him a rectangular Pokémon with orange and purple markings. It was at least three feet wide, though no more than a foot tall. It gave an unintelligible squeak upon noticing Orange, Red, and Violet, the latter two of whom had just caught up.

"What is that?" Red asked. As an answer, Orange held out his Pokédex.

"A, the Speed Demon Pokémon," droned the device. "A has exceptionally pitiful offensive capabilities, but is among the fastest of any known Pokémon. Very rare, A prefer to live solitary lives."

"Oh, sweet!" Orange exclaimed. "A are so rare! I gotta catch this!" Wasting no time, he took a Poké Ball and launched it. "Attack it, Q!" he exclaimed.

The ball opened up, allowing Orange's Q to materialize. At the sight of its Water/Psychic adversary, A rose slightly to match Q's height.

"Q, use your Headbutt attack!" ordered Orange.

"Kyuuuu," replied Q softly as it charged forward. A reacted swiftly by cartwheeling in place, resembling an oddly colored propeller as it unleashed a powerful wind. Q cried out in pain as the attack landed.

"That's A's Razor Wind," warned Violet.

"Yeah, I know that!" Orange replied impatiently. "Q, try Confusion!"

Q launched a beam of blue psychic energy, to which A responded by firing off a barrage of gold coins from the center of its body. The Pay Day attack was not nearly enough to keep Confusion at bay. Indeed, as the Psychic move struck its Normal/Normal-type target, Q made use of its psychic powers to pick up the coins and drop them in Orange's pockets. Upon taking the hit, A did not hit the ground, but it did seem a little less steady in its floating. Satisfied, Orange produced an empty Poké Ball from his backpack. A squeaked in fright at the sight of the sphere.

"Poké Ball! Go!" Orange shouted. Screaming in protest, A zipped away and was back within seconds, shoving what appeared to be a brown bird with red wings into the path of the sphere instead. This new Pokémon was violently struggling against the A, but was suctioned into the ball nonetheless. Once this happened, A flew off into the distance with such swiftness that Red merely had to blink before the Speed Demon Pokémon was gone.

"Awww!" Orange complained as he picked up the Poké Ball. "I wanted A! Not this thing!"

"What did you catch, anyway?" asked Red. "It all happened so fast I didn't get a good look."

In answer, Orange threw the ball straight up. In a flash of light, his new Pokémon materialized. Its plumage, though mainly brown, was also black in some spots, mainly the back of its head. Its wing feathers, on the other hand, were crimson.

"Spearow, the Tiny Bird Pokémon," droned Orange's Pokédex. "Spearow will fly at great speeds in order to defend its territory. It is known for its vicious temperament."

"Speeeeeeeeeearowwww!" cawed the Spearow, obviously displeased at having been captured as it dove towards Orange, who ducked just in time.

"Call it back, Orange!" Violet shouted.

"Spearow, return now!" Orange called hastily, holding out the Poké Ball as Spearow wheeled around for a second attempt.

"Orange, maybe you should release Spearow," said Red. "Don't get me wrong, I'm glad you finally caught a Pokémon I'm actually familiar with, but it seems a bit unruly."

"Are you kidding?" responded Orange, breaking out into a wide grin. "Spearow's just gotta get used to me, that's all. Nothing a few battles won't fix. Come on!" And he took off down the road yet again.

"Don't take it personally, Red," sighed Violet as the two of them began walking after Orange yet again. "The better the advice is, the less likely he is to take it."

"I'm beginning to pick up on that, yeah," replied Red.
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"Hey! I saw you in Ivadirin Forest!" exclaimed a young boy dressed in a white shirt, shorts, and a wide-brimmed hat. A butterfly net was slung over his shoulder.

Orange screeched to a halt and addressed the youth. "Jimmy?"

"No, no, my name's Calvin," replied the Bug Catcher. "I know Jimmy, though. No, I just saw you running for the exit last night, like your life depended on it. What was that about anyway?"

"Long story," shrugged Orange as Violet and Red caught up. "But you didn't stop me just to hear that."

"That's what I want to hear from a Pokémon Trainer!" exclaimed Calvin, suddenly producing a Poké Ball and throwing it. "Pokémon fight! Go, Caterpie!"

Calvin's Poké Ball split open to reveal the diminutive Bug-type, identical to what Flutters had looked like when Violet first caught it. Orange suppressed a shudder at the sight of Caterpie, then threw his own Poké Ball. "Let's do it! Spearow, I choose you!"

"Orange, are you insane?" Violet demanded as Spearow emerged from the ball, cawing loudly.

"I know what I'm doing," Orange said dismissively as he consulted his Pokédex. "Spearow, use Peck!"

"Speeeeee!" was Spearow's response as it rose high into the air and dove back down- right at Orange. Calvin and his Caterpie exchanged glances as Orange evaded an attack from his own Pokémon.

"Not me, birdbrain!" exclaimed Orange. "Attack the Caterpie! Peck!"

"Rooooooowwwwwwwwwwww!" replied Spearow as it dive-bombed its trainer yet again, who had to back up hastily to evade it (stepping on Violet's feet in the process)

"Yeah, this is going nowhere fast," Calvin said as he withdrew Caterpie. "Good luck with that angry bird."

"Hey... HEY, THAT MEANS YOU FORFEIT, YOU KNOW!" bellowed Orange as Calvin walked away. "I WIN BY DEFAUL- OW! Spearow, cut that out!" he added as Spearow slammed into its trainer's head. Orange hastily made to withdraw Spearow. "What?" he asked, for Violet was looking at him and rolling her eyes. "It's a forfeit if the other guy just gives up and walks away, right?"

"Pretty sure in an official match, you'd have been disqualified for using a disobedient Pokémon long before the opponent would have thought to quit," said Violet.

"Well, how else is Spearow gonna learn to obey me?" Orange said defensively. "Gotta work with it, don't I?"

"He's got a point, I guess," conceded Red.

"Fine," Violet sighed, rolling her eyes yet again. "Just don't use it against other trainers until it starts listening to you."

"Yeah, yeah, whatever- ooh! Another trainer!" Orange exclaimed, having spotted a figure in the distance. "Hey! HEY! You want to battle my Spearow?" he shouted as he ran after the figure.

"I see what you mean about how he takes advice," said Red as he and Violet walked off after him.

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End of Chapter 7.

Treecko's Awesomeness
30th May 2012, 5:32 AM
Well , MM, another brilliant chapter. I've got to say, I never would have come up with a Pokemon throwing another Pokemon in front of a Pokeball. That was great! Once again, though, "said" is not a bad word, and don't rely on adverbs. I'd have to double check, butI think you used both excitedly and hastily twice a-pice in one paragraph. Trust me, your verbs and nouns are strong enough to work well without using adverbs as crutches. A general rule: If the adverb doesn't (pardon my hypocracy) drastically change the meaning of the sentence, you should probably take it out. If it does, try to find another way to say the same thing. For example, instead of saying "he said sarcastically", consider having him roll his eyes. Show, don't tell. So, that's about it. Keep up the good work!

-;201-t;;201-a;

3D992
30th May 2012, 5:49 AM
Aw man.... I wanted Orange to catch A. I guess A's "the one that got away".

Knightfall
30th May 2012, 11:17 AM
Nice chapter, as usual. Even more so since there's a Charmeleon in it, I am now happy.
So badges for everyone now, and a trip to Moon Canyon. There will be Zubats, even in this glitch world, they will still swarm...

A would have been a nice capture, but you can't always get what you want. Spearow will just have to do for now, at least Orange will have a fun time making it not try to kill him.
And, no, I can't believe it's not butter.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

Jonah the Slaking
30th May 2012, 2:52 PM
Orange, y u no develop as a character?!

Well, anyway, nice chapter. Spearow > Pidgey, but Pidgeot > Fearow, so my opinions are mixed on the new capture. I was expecting Flutters to evolve again before Charmander, though, considering the level gap between the two.

Treecko's Awesomeness
30th May 2012, 5:43 PM
I'm probably the only one who's glad Orange didn't catch A. Any character with a name that's also used as a word about twelve times per paragraph gets confusing.

Missingno. Master
30th May 2012, 6:16 PM
Well , MM, another brilliant chapter. I've got to say, I never would have come up with a Pokemon throwing another Pokemon in front of a Pokeball. That was great!
Glad you liked it. I was originally just gonna have Orange battle and catch Spearow, but I wanted to shake things up a little bit.


Once again, though, "said" is not a bad word, and don't rely on adverbs. I'd have to double check, butI think you used both excitedly and hastily twice a-pice in one paragraph. Trust me, your verbs and nouns are strong enough to work well without using adverbs as crutches. A general rule: If the adverb doesn't (pardon my hypocracy) drastically change the meaning of the sentence, you should probably take it out. If it does, try to find another way to say the same thing. For example, instead of saying "he said sarcastically", consider having him roll his eyes. Show, don't tell. So, that's about it. Keep up the good work!

-;201-t;;201-a;
I thought I was doing a bit better about using "said" and that sort of thing. Well, thanks, I'll keep working on it.


Aw man.... I wanted Orange to catch A. I guess A's "the one that got away".
The funny thing is, Spearow was always the intended capture here. Though I do admit that A is awesome. I have one myself in Blue, it knows Pay Day, Hydro Pump, Reflect, and Transform. Think about that- pretty much the fastest Pokémon in the game, and it can use Transform. How is that not awesome?


Nice chapter, as usual. Even more so since there's a Charmeleon in it, I am now happy.
I know how you feel. I love it whenever someone includes a Weezing in their fanfic.


So badges for everyone now, and a trip to Moon Canyon. There will be Zubats, even in this glitch world, they will still swarm...
Yes, some things just never change.


A would have been a nice capture, but you can't always get what you want. Spearow will just have to do for now, at least Orange will have a fun time making it not try to kill him.
Oh, it'll be a fun time... for the guy writing the scenes. Heh, heh, heh.


And, no, I can't believe it's not butter.
Can anyone?


Orange, y u no develop as a character?!
Give him time. A lot of time.


I'm probably the only one who's glad Orange didn't catch A. Any character with a name that's also used as a word about twelve times per paragraph gets confusing.
Yeah, that probably might get confusing.

3D992
30th May 2012, 7:25 PM
I'm probably the only one who's glad Orange didn't catch A. Any character with a name that's also used as a word about twelve times per paragraph gets confusing.

True. It was quite confusing.

UltimatePokemonExpert
31st May 2012, 2:33 AM
I'm a little surprised, I expected Orange to catch nothing but glitch pokemon. Great chapter by the way. Can't believe its not butter, haha!

TheDarkDragons
31st May 2012, 3:00 AM
...Like I said, you never know.


Chapter 7: Red's Rattata Run
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Red took several deep breaths to steady himself as he stared across the giant battlefield, though he know that his Charmander and Rattata didn't really stand a chance against a Geodude and Rhyhorn.

It's knew, not know. Awesome chapter. However, I thought that Orange was going for a team of glitch Pokemon (Or it seems like that anyway). So is he going to trade it to Red or Violet? I also noticed the balls just open instead of flash/burst with light. Nice to see a change sometimes.

Missingno. Master
31st May 2012, 1:55 PM
I'm a little surprised, I expected Orange to catch nothing but glitch pokemon. Great chapter by the way. Can't believe its not butter, haha!


It's knew, not know. Awesome chapter. However, I thought that Orange was going for a team of glitch Pokemon (Or it seems like that anyway). So is he going to trade it to Red or Violet? I also noticed the balls just open instead of flash/burst with light. Nice to see a change sometimes.

I already have their final teams planned out. Orange's includes a decent mixture of Glitch and official Pokémon. He won't be trading Spearow away, just wait and see how that turns out.

Z-nogyroP
1st June 2012, 1:16 AM
That was a great chapter, and in regards to Rattata learning Water Gun:
I so totally called it!

I hope Orange ends up catching a Weezing as one of the official Pokemon he's getting. Knowing Missingno. Master, not unlikely. :)

Oh, and I hope Violet gets a Vileplume! It would be awesome! Go animated rafflesia!

3D992
1st June 2012, 3:04 AM
I'm sure red will get a glitch pokemon eventually. For character development and such.

ESPNfanatic35
2nd June 2012, 5:48 AM
Lol I knew knightfall would be excited about Charmeleon.

The gym battle with Red was great and that was some legit strategy he used with switching Rattata and Charmander back and forth like that. Orange and Violet's bickering is always funny (well, mostly Orange acting like an and Violet being annoyed at how much of an idiot he is lol). And yeah, gym leaders always seem to be the victims of Pokemon evolving in the middle of their battles. I can understand Minerva's pain.

Well done and can't wait for more!

TheDarkDragons
2nd June 2012, 7:06 AM
...Like I said, you never know.


Chapter 7: Red's Rattata Run
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Red took several deep breaths to steady himself as he stared across the giant battlefield, though he know that his Charmander and Rattata didn't really stand a chance against a Geodude and Rhyhorn.

It's knew, not know.

Still need to fix that.

SneaselFTW
13th June 2012, 4:18 PM
Nice fic. Could you add me to the PM list please!
Pretty good grammar, but I noticed one mistake.


"Charmander, Ember!" ordered Charmander.

Other than that, the grammar's fine!

Missingno. Master
13th June 2012, 4:35 PM
Nice fic. Could you add me to the PM list please!
Pretty good grammar, but I noticed one mistake.



Other than that, the grammar's fine!

Sure thing! And thanks for catching that. That was weird.


The next chapter is getting done. Slowly, but it's getting done. I've just been really lazy lately. I'm hoping to get it done by the end of the week. Sometime next week at the very latest.

Eeveeon8
15th June 2012, 4:12 AM
Whoo!!!
This is awesome!
Now to meditate quietly and try to think of an actual review.

jeffdavid102
15th June 2012, 11:42 PM
Just caught up. Can I be added to the PM list? I'm enjoying learning about glitch Pokemon. My only comment: I know you gave Jack a lot of Poison-Types in AoA, but don't be afraid to use some again in this story. Orange can catch a Weezing or Arbok or Nidoking if you want him too. Maybe even Nidoqueen. Jack never got one of them

Missingno. Master
15th June 2012, 11:46 PM
Just caught up. Can I be added to the PM list? I'm enjoying learning about glitch Pokemon. My only comment: I know you gave Jack a lot of Poison-Types in AoA, but don't be afraid to use some again in this story. Orange can catch a Weezing or Arbok or Nidoking if you want him too. Maybe even Nidoqueen. Jack never got one of them

Sure thing. And I already have Red, Orange, and Violet's final teams planned out, and there are Poison-types present in these plans. As to who gets what, I won't say just yet.

Eeveeon8
16th June 2012, 6:13 PM
Oh, forgot, can you add me to the PM list?

Missingno. Master
18th June 2012, 4:44 PM
Oh, forgot, can you add me to the PM list?

Not a problem.

Expect the next chapter within days.

Missingno. Master
21st June 2012, 2:36 AM
Sorry for the wait. These summer days are making me lazy. More than usual, anyway.


Chapter 8: Bad Day At Moon Canyon
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"Spearow, Fury Attack!" commanded Orange.

"Z4, use your own Fury Attack!" said Orange's Bug Catcher opponent.

The enemy's Z4 sprouted several sharp stingers all over its body and threw itself through the air, though Orange's Spearow took no notice as it flew up high and attempted to dive-bomb its own trainer.

"Hey! HEY!" roared Orange as he narrowly avoided being skewered by his own Spearow. "Not me, Spearow! Attack the enemy!"

"...OK..." the Bug Catcher said slowly, as he realized that the battle wasn't likely to go anywhere fast. "I'm just gonna... leave now." He then proceeded to withdraw Z4 back into its Poké Ball and slowly walk away.

"Hah! I win again! You forfeit! I win aga-OW!" Orange exclaimed as Spearow slammed into him. "Spearow, return!"

Once Spearow was back in its Poké Ball, Red and Violet approached him. Orange grinned at his companions.

"Another victory for me!" he said. "That's four in a row now!"

"They didn't forfeit," sighed Violet for what felt like the trillionth time that day. "They knew your Spearow wasn't gonna attack their Pokémon, so they just left."

"Hey, they're the ones with no patience!" Orange said. "They leave, they forfeit!"

"Orange?"

"Yes?"

"Shut up."

Though Orange stopped talking, he still shot a glare at Violet as the trio continued walking.

The scenery changed somewhat. Though it still looked as random as ever, there was more rock than ever mixed in with the weird square puddles of water, stacks of roofing tiles, and tall trees that looked like they were shoddily built out of fragments of drywall, chunks of brick, ice cubes, and tin cans. Then, Red saw it.

"Whoa," he murmured. For at that point, the ground looked as if it had been cracked open, on a massive scale. The resulting chasm was several miles across, easily.

"Yep," nodded Orange. "This is Moon Canyon."

The walls of Moon Canyon looked very much like the ground on which they walked- random chunks of rock, dirt, grass, odd and out-of-place puddles of water, and the occasional number. Numerous large holes could be seen in various parts of the walls, presumably leading to a network of underground tunnels.

"So how do we get across?" asked Red.

"Oh! I got it!" exclaimed Orange. "Maybe if we get up a good running start, we can jump across it! What?" he added defensively, for Red and Violet had both turned to him with odd expressions on their faces.

"Orange, a Hitmonlee wouldn't be able to make that jump," Violet said. "You can't seriously think you'd be able to."

"Wait a minute," Red said thoughtfully. "I got an idea. What if we just have Q float us across with its psychic powers?"

"Huh... that's actually a good idea," nodded Violet.

"Yeah!" added Orange.

"Nope," came a gruff voice from behind the trio. Simultaneously, they wheeled around to find themselves face-to-face with a very bulky man in hiking gear. "'Fraid that won't work. You ain't the first trainers with ideas like that, I'll have you know."

"Who are you?" asked Red.

"Name's Marc," replied the man. "I'm a hiker, see. Came out to Moon Canyon for a little fun. Gonna climb down one side, then go up the other. That's yer best bet, far as getting across this thing is concerned."

"I'm no good at that sort of thing," Violet said quietly. "Why didn't they just build a bridge across it anyway?"

"They did," Marc said. "Only thing is, there weren't enough funds, so they had to go with one of them cheap rope bridges. Snapped like a twig just two weeks back. Just glad no one was hurt, it had just been due to some Zubat gnawing on the ropes."

"So why don't they fix it?" asked Orange.

Marc shrugged. "Damned if I know," he said. "Probably they realized that kind of bridge weren't that safe, and they're saving up to build something more reliable."

"Wait a minute," Red said. "Why wouldn't using Q's psychic powers to float across the canyon work anyway?"

"Ah, now, as fer that, I can't really say for sure. Telekinetic power never seemed to work right around this canyon. Some say it was cause of that giant Moon Stone what formed this thing to begin with, but I dunno. So anyways, I dunno about you, but I'm climbing my way across that canyon." With that, he headed towards the edge and slowly began to climb down. Red peered over the side and saw that Marc was taking advantage of places where the rocks and numbers jutted out of the canyon's sides, using them to climb down the sheer slope as if it were a ladder.

"That doesn't look too hard, actually," said Red. "What say we give it a shot?"

"I dunno," Orange said warily.

"Orange, stop being such a wuss," snapped Violet. "Red's right, it looks a lot easier than I thought it would be. What's the worst that can happen?"

Though still clearly uncertain about the whole thing, Orange relented. Red started down the side of the canyon, followed by Violet, who was followed by Orange. Red was right- it was easy. The rocks and numbers that jutted out proved to be more than capable of supporting their weight, and were very easy to grip. About halfway down, however, a loud cracking noise could be heard from above Red, followed by Orange's mutter of "Uh-oh."

"I'm almost afraid to ask-" began Red before Orange, having accidentally dislodged a seven with his foot, lost his balance completely and fell onto Violet, who fell onto Red, sending the three trainers plummeting into the abyss.

Down they fell, until with a great SPLASH, they landed in what appeared to be a small pond at the bottom of the canyon, except it seemed to be immeasurably deep. As Red climbed out, he saw Violet doing the same. Then he looked around and realized who was missing.

"Where's Orange?" asked Red.

"Oh, no," gasped Violet. "He can't swim! And these things can get up to fifty feet deep!"

"Oh, man," said Red as Violet got ready to jump back into the water, tears starting to form in her eyes. "Oh, damn! Violet, we gotta do something."

"I'm gonna jump in after him," Violet declared as she approached the edge of the water. Just as she bent her knees and prepared to jump, however, a familiar redheaded figure broke through the surface of the water.

"Orange!" Red exclaimed. "Are you OK- What in the hell are you riding?" For beneath Orange was a strange cubelike being, three feet in every direction, with a blocky and random pattern of various shades of blue all over its body. Out of sheer curiosity, Red held his Pokédex out.

"LM4, the Bubble Cube Pokémon," droned Red's Pokédex. "Though famed for its violent battle style, LM4 is kind-hearted. It will always try to rescue any drowning human it encounters."

"L M," cooed LM4, happy that Orange was OK.

"Hey, guys!" grinned Orange. "Sorry about that. That was awesome, LM4 saved me!"

"I'm glad you're OK," said Red, grinning back. Violet, too, was smiling, though she remained quiet. LM4 drifted to the edge of the deep pond, allowing Orange to climb back onto dry land.

"Thanks, LM4," Orange said as the trio began to walk across the bottom of the canyon, making for the other side. They were shortly stopped, however, by Marc.

"You kids OK?" he asked. "I'd have helped out, only I couldn't climb down no faster."

"Yeah, we're fine, thanks," Violet said. "We-"

At that moment, however, a tremendous explosion rocked the entire canyon, coming from the trio's left. Red led the way as they ran over to see what was happening. Once the dust had settled, they could see a group of men, dressed in identical purple outfits, the shirts all emblazoned with a large, orange "E".

"Hey, what's going on here?" demanded Orange. This caused them to notice the trio.

"Hey! What are you kids doing here?" snapped one of the men, stepping forward, a Poké Ball in his right hand. "We're in the middle of an important mission here, so beat it!"

Violet, however, gasped. "Orange!" she breathed. "That's Team Error!"

"Oh, so you've heard of us, have you?" sneered another man. "Fans of ours, are you?"

"Hardly," Violet replied coldly. "I've heard of you, all right, the way you all cause all sorts of trouble, just like that Team Debug!"

At these words, many of the Team Error grunts let out low hisses.

"Do not compare us to those extremist nincompoops!" roared the first man. "Team Debug's goal is to wipe out entire races of Pokémon! We, the noble Team Error, exist to thwart the dastardly efforts of Team Debug!"

"So what do the explosions accomplish, anyway?" asked Orange.

"Simple," the second man replied. "Team Debug is funding research to have the fossils of ancient Pokémon restored, so we're trying to destroy all the fossils-"

"Idiot!" roared the first man, slapping the second grunt in the face. "What did you tell them that for? Don't you remember what the boss said? Never, never reveal our plans to outsiders!"

"Hey, what gives?!" said the second man defensively. "I didn't reveal our plan to... to... oh, I guess I kinda did, didn't I?"

The first man facepalmed. "I knew the boss was having trouble with finding good recruits, but this is ridiculous," he muttered.

"Uh, Jeff?" the second man said. "Don't we still gotta deal with these kids?"

"What do you mean, deal with us?" Orange exclaimed defiantly.

"I dunno. I mean, they can't be all bad, Larry," Jeff said fairly. "That LM4 there really seems to like the redhead."

"Hmm?" Orange said in surprise. He turned around, and sure enough, the LM4 from before was flopping around his feet, happily exclaiming "L! M! LM4!"

"Yeah, that's true," the second man, apparently called Larry, said. "It's rare to see a trainer that's so liked by Modern Pokémon."

"Modern Pokémon?" repeated Red questioningly.

"Yeah, Modern Pokémon," said Jeff. "The ones that are really geometric in shape. LM4, .4, 44Hy, and the like. Team Debug, see, hates those kinds of Pokémon, calls them Glitch Pokémon." Jeff made a distasteful face as he spoke those last two words. "They seem to think Modern Pokémon aren't natural, and prefer to stick with Old Pokémon, stuff like Raichu and Goldeen and Weezing. Still, for kids who like Modern Pokémon, why are you opposing us?"

"Well, for one thing, fossils belong in museums," stated Violet. "You're blowing up pieces of history."

"It's a little iffy, yeah," conceded Jeff, "but we got our orders. The boss wants us to stop Team Debug's plans before they start. Say, could we see the rest of the Modern Pokémon you all have?"

"OK..." said Orange as he took all the Poké Balls off his belt and threw them. "Come on out, everybody!"

The balls burst open and unleashed blasts of energy which formed themselves into Q, .4, and Spearow. Larry nodded approvingly at .4, but Jeff narrowed his eyes at the sight of Spearow.

"You dare possess an Old Pokémon?" he exclaimed. "What are you, a Debug loyalist or something?! You try to gain our trust with your Modern Pokémon, and then you pull this garbage?!"

"What's the difference, anyway?!" Orange exploded. "Pokémon are Pokémon! I'll admit Spearow and I don't get along that well, but I still love him the same as the rest of my team!"

Spearow, meanwhile, had paused in his ascent, which would probably have led to dive-bombing. Unknown to anyone else, he was listening to what Orange was saying.

"Well, then, we'll just have to teach you proper respect, won't we?" sneered Jeff as he threw a Poké Ball. "Go! pPkMnp!"

Jeff's Poké Ball unleashed into the open a black-and-white being with sparse blue and red markings. It was rectangular in shape, though it was more vertical than A had been. Its entire left side was cloaked in a sinister purple aura. It let loose a deep roar. Orange took out his Pokédex and pointed it at the creature.

"pPkMnp, the Fortress Pokémon," said the Pokédex. "pPkMnp moves slowly and cannot attack with much effectiveness. Its true strengths lie in its rock-solid defense. pPkMnp is of the Poison-type."

"This will be tricky, Orange," warned Violet. "Physical blows will do almost nothing to a pPkMnp!"

Before Orange could reply to this, LM4 had flopped its way in front of Orange. "Four!" it exclaimed defiantly.

"Wow," Red said. "Orange, I think LM4 wants to fight p... pkm... that thing!"

"I'd say so," Orange murmured. "Is this true, LM4?"

"L! LM!" LM4 exclaimed in an encouraging tone.

Orange then broke out into a wide grin as he consulted his Pokédex for a list of LM4's attacks. "Ooh," he muttered. "Lot of good ones here. All right, LM4! Water Gun!"

"Foooouuur!" bellowed LM4 as it let loose a stream of water from the front of its body.

"pPkMnp, use Sludge!" Jeff growled.

pPkMnp roared as a stream of thick, smelly, black liquid blasted forth from its body, meeting the Water Gun halfway. Neither move allowed the other to make any further progress, and the two combatants quickly ceased to use them.

"LM4, Quick Attack now!" Orange commanded.

With blinding speed, LM4 leapt off the ground and lunged at pPkMnp, only to bounce off the Poison-type's body with a resounding CLAAAAANG.

"Orange, I told you, physical moves won't do much to it!" Violet hissed.

"We got 'im now!" Jeff exclaimed. "Use Thunder!"

"Aurora Beam now!" Orange called desperately.

As pPkMnp's body crackled with electricity, LM4 unleashed a rainbow-colored ray from one of its corners, causing the Fortress Pokémon to roar in pain. It fell backwards and hit the ground with a thud, and moved no more.

"Nice one, LM4!" Orange exclaimed as Jeff withdrew his pPkMnp. Larry, however, took Jeff's place, throwing a Poké Ball of his own.

"Now it's my turn!" he declared. Go, 7g!"

In a flash of light, a small, pink cube with strange, dot-like black and white markings materialized. It floated in midair, appearing to be not much larger than a .4.

"G...." it muttered in a voice which suggested an overall lack of intelligence. Curious, Red held his Pokédex out at this newcomer.

"7g, the Slow Pokémon," it droned. "Though low in intelligence, it will always obey an order given to it. Even if ordered to use a move it does not know, it will attempt to use it anyway."

"LM4, you can't do this," insisted Orange. "You're a Water and Fighting-type, and 7g is a Water and Psychic-type. You're at a disadvantage."

"M!" replied LM4 defiantly as it made a motion similar to shaking one's head.

"Are you sure?" Orange asked.

"Four," was the response. This time, LM4 seemed to be nodding.

"Your funeral," said Larry. "7g, Confusion!"

"Seeeevvveeeeen...." yawned 7g as it unleashed a ray of blue Psychic energy.

"Dodge it with Quick Attack!" Orange exclaimed. Swiftly, LM4 bounded out of the way of the attack, then lunged at 7g and tackled it to the ground.

"Use Double-Edge, 7g!" roared Larry.

"LM4, PoisonPowder!" Orange commanded.

7g rose back into the air and prepared to slam into LM4, only to be met with a cloud of shimmering purple dust, sprayed from the four topmost corners of the cube that was LM4. 7g instead fell to the ground and began coughing.

"Let's wrap this up!" Orange shouted triumphantly. "Rolling Kick!"

"Foooooooooooooooooour!" LM4 called out as it bounded into the air. Out of its side sprouted a mass of glowing brown energy which formed itself into a foot-like shape. LM4 then began spinning around as it descended, and slammed its foot into 7g, plowing it into the ground.

Scowling, Larry withdrew his unconscious 7g. "This is not over," he said menacingly.

"Oh, I think it is," sneered Violet as she took out a Poké Ball of her own. "Flutters, use your Sleep Powd-"

"Error Smoke Screen!" one of the grunts randomly shouted as he threw a small, grey sphere to the ground. Almost before the Butterfree was clear of its Poké Ball, the smoke cleared, revealing the Error Grunts to have fled. Then, a familiar pinging sound could be heard from behind Orange and Violet- the sound of a Poké Ball successfully catching a Pokémon. Simultaneously, they turned around to spot Red gleefully scooping up a Poké Ball.

"Red, what's that?" asked Violet.

"Didn't you see me and LM4 battle?" asked Orange dejectedly.

"Of course I did," said Red. "But I saw that one of those rocks that was loosened by the explosion was about to flatten a wild Paras, so I did the first thing I could think of- I threw a Poké Ball at it. The ball knocked Paras out of the rock's path, and then caught it. OK, Paras, come on out," he added as he held out the ball. In a flash of light, a small, orange creature appeared. It had four small legs, and two larger front ones, which more closely resembled claws than anything else. A pair of large, beady eyes poked out of its front, directly above its small mouth. On its back sat a pair of small mushrooms.

"Paaaras?" squeaked the Pokémon, seeming to only just become aware that it was not about to be crushed by a falling boulder. Orange stifled a squeak as he hid behind Violet and held out his Pokédex.

"Paras, the Mushroom Pokémon," droned the device. "Paras burrows underground to suck on tree roots. Its mushrooms grow by absorbing nutrients from the bug host. Paras is a Bug and Grass-type."

"It's kinda cute," smiled Violet.

"It's kind of a Bug-type," shuddered Orange.

"Well, I like it," declared Red. "I was only trying to rescue it, but now that I see it up close, I kinda like this little guy." At these words, Paras happily climbed up onto Red's shoulder.

Orange opened his mouth, possibly to object to Paras's inclusion in the group, when a small cry of "Fooooour?" distracted him. He looked down to see LM4 gently nudging him.

"Wha- Ohhhh," smiled Orange as he knelt down to LM4. "You wanna come with me, don't you?"

"L! LM4!" exclaimed LM4 happily.

Now grinning widely, Orange took a Poké Ball out of his backpack and wordlessly tapped LM4 with it. The Bubble Cube Pokémon was transformed into transparent red energy and vacuumed into the sphere. The Poké Ball barely wobbled before making its telltale ping sound.

"All right!" Orange exclaimed. "I caught an LM4!"

"Cool, I guess," said Red as Orange withdrew Q, .4, and Spearow. "Truth be told, I'm still really weirded out by all these different Pokémon."

"You'll get used to them, Red," Violet said kindly. "I know, Tanko is still kind of a strange place to you-"

"Oh, come on," scoffed Orange. "What part of this place could possibly be considered strange?

"Orange?"

"Yes?"

"Shut up."


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End of Chapter 8.

jeffdavid102
21st June 2012, 4:22 AM
I like the idea. You incorporated another off-screen capture but this one was different. It made more sense and seemed more thought out than other ones you've done in AoA. BTW, I noticed in your signature, it only says chapter 6 is up in 404 Error. I believe we're on chapter 8.
I think the following is a bit obviously going to happen:
Red is eventually going to catch a Glitch Pokemon and love the "modern Pokemon" like how Misty got over her bug-phobia and became more fond of bug types than anyone else in the group.

SneaselFTW
21st June 2012, 5:17 PM
Cool. I can't spot any grammar mistakes. My current favourite pokemon of this fic is Spearow. But I don't think that Spearow's going to attack Orange any more cause of the speech. :(

Missingno. Master
21st June 2012, 5:41 PM
I like the idea. You incorporated another off-screen capture but this one was different. It made more sense and seemed more thought out than other ones you've done in AoA. BTW, I noticed in your signature, it only says chapter 6 is up in 404 Error. I believe we're on chapter 8.
Yeah, forgot about that. Fixed, thanks.


Red is eventually going to catch a Glitch Pokemon and love the "modern Pokemon" like how Misty got over her bug-phobia and became more fond of bug types than anyone else in the group.

Maybe. Maybe not.

What? You were expecting a spoiler in this spoiler tag?


Cool. I can't spot any grammar mistakes. My current favourite pokemon of this fic is Spearow. But I don't think that Spearow's going to attack Orange any more cause of the speech. :(

Orange's speech certainly will have had an effect on Spearow.

Knightfall
21st June 2012, 7:31 PM
Nice chapter, we are introduced to Team Error and see that they are just as messed up as Team Debug. Lots of battling and two new Pokemon join the group.
Sorry about the short post, I got a bad connection where I am, but I'm not going to let that spoil my record of posting after every chapter.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

Missingno. Master
21st June 2012, 8:30 PM
Nice chapter, we are introduced to Team Error and see that they are just as messed up as Team Debug. Lots of battling and two new Pokemon join the group.
Sorry about the short post, I got a bad connection where I am, but I'm not going to let that spoil my record of posting after every chapter.

Knightfall signing off...;005;

Glad you like it! And don't worry about the short post. I'm too impressed by your dedication to be bothered by it.

UltimatePokemonExpert
21st June 2012, 9:59 PM
Awesome chapter! Finally Red captures a new pokemon, it's been awhile. Good work MM.

Moonlight Amaryllis
23rd June 2012, 1:01 AM
Well. This is something. I read a little bit of your Adventures of Adventureness and grew bored rather fast. But this story is actually pretty interesting!

I keep on referencing to Bulbapedia to these Glitch Pokemon, and is it my imagination, or are they all almost the exact same thing?!

Throwing in this whole parallel universe thing in actually somewhat appealing. Watching Red scratching his head along with the rest of us over the weirdness of this all is keeping me sane, I think.

There are errors. Fix them. Or else.

The oldest game I've ever played was FireRed...

Can I be on the PM list?

I made an equation with this story;

Orange=Idiot

Oh, yeah, andnfhb3685 SHUTTING DOOOWWWN ERROR ERROR

(Sorry, Knightfall for ripping you off)

Eeveeon8
24th June 2012, 7:35 PM
Nice story! Now to stop reading so I can read the Serpent's Shadow by Rick Riordan. I can't wait for the next chapter! I might have to make sprites for the trainers. Hurray!

Missingno. Master
24th June 2012, 10:21 PM
Awesome chapter! Finally Red captures a new pokemon, it's been awhile. Good work MM.
Thanks, glad to see you liked it.


Well. This is something. I read a little bit of your Adventures of Adventureness and grew bored rather fast. But this story is actually pretty interesting!
Well, I'm glad you think so. Not the part about getting bored with The Adventure of Adventureness, the bit about how this story is interesting.


I keep on referencing to Bulbapedia to these Glitch Pokemon, and is it my imagination, or are they all almost the exact same thing?!
It's probably best to consult Bulbapedia for info on the Glitch Pokémon. Some of them do indeed have things in common with each other. Some of them look the same as others (tbh I haven't worked out how I'm gonna handle that yet, but it will be addressed at one point), some share identical movepools, and so forth.


Throwing in this whole parallel universe thing in actually somewhat appealing. Watching Red scratching his head along with the rest of us over the weirdness of this all is keeping me sane, I think.
And there is a lot more head-scratching to come for poor Red. Certain... unique aspects of Tanko's unusual terrain will come into the story soon enough.


There are errors. Fix them. Or else.
Point out any errors I've missed and I'll be glad to fix 'em.


The oldest game I've ever played was FireRed...
Well, RBY's where it started for me, so I'm pretty familiar with the original games. Back in those days, Wrap was actually worth using, Hyper Beam didn't make you recharge if the opponent was KO'd by it, and Toxic + Leech Seed was a combination to be feared and dreaded. Oh, lord, now I feel old.


Can I be on the PM list?
Not a problem.


I made an equation with this story;

Orange=Idiot
You=right


Nice story! Now to stop reading so I can read the Serpent's Shadow by Rick Riordan. I can't wait for the next chapter! I might have to make sprites for the trainers. Hurray!
Ooh, sprites, I'd like to see those. FYI, for Red's sprite, it'd be more like how Red dressed back in Generation I than how his current sprites and artwork depict him, FYI.

The next chapter, I'll be honest, I have not started yet. I'll probably be getting out the next Special Chapter for The Adventure of Adventureness first, whenever I get that done. I'll try to get something done by the end of the month, but beyond that, no promises.

Missingno. Master
27th June 2012, 3:53 PM
OK, you know how I said I'd probably get the next Adventure of Adventureness special chapter out before the next 404 Error chapter? Yeah, not so much. I'll be honest, I'm growing more fond of writing for this than for The Adventure of Adventureness. Only slightly, though. I still enjoy writing that, just not as much as this, at least at the moment. But enough about that, enjoy Chapter 9!


Chapter 9: Adventures in Psyduck-Sitting
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The rest of the journey through Moon Canyon was relatively uneventful. The trio climbed their way out of the canyon, ending up on the opposite end from where they started, with not a single issue.

"Well, thank goodness we got out of there," remarked Orange as he looked back at the vast chasm. "Should be smooth sailing the rest of the way to Ruceelna City."

"Good," said Red. "Though with the Gym coming up, don't you guys think we ought to get in some training?"

"Good thinking, Red," nodded Violet. "OK, so who's gonna battle who first? Wait, hold that thought, what's that?"

Confused, Red turned to look, for something behind him had caught Violet's attention. It quickly became evident what it was; making its way unsteadily across the rough and uneven terrain was a plump, yellow creature with a large, flat bill on its face. It waddled on a pair of webbed feet that seemed to be directly attached to the bottom of its body, without any legs, and it was clutching its head with a pair of limbs that appeared to be halfway between arms and wings.

"Oh, a Psyduck!" said Red, having spotted the Pokémon. "I've seen those before." Violet took out her Pokédex and pointed it at the Psyduck.

"Psyduck, the Duck Pokémon," the device droned. "Constantly plagued by a headache. It has been known to exhibit mysterious powers on occasion."

"Wait, so that thing always has a headache?" asked Orange. "That is weird."

"Well, I like it," grinned Violet as she readied a Poké Ball. "I think I know what I'm catching today!" She then threw the sphere. "Chompy, I choose you!" she called out.

The ball split open, and in a flash of light, Violet's Bellsprout appeared. "Bellsprout," it said as it faced Psyduck, who had only just noticed the group.

"Psy?" asked Psyduck as it tilted its head, its face registering a look of total cluelessness.

"Chompy, Vine Whip now!" Violet ordered.

"Sprooouut!" exclaimed Chompy as it extended a pair of slender green vines, intent on whipping the Psyduck with them. Psyduck, however, moved quickly; it stopped clutching its head and instead used its wing-like arms to grab the ends of the vines and yank on them, pulling Chompy in close. Psyduck then wrapped its arms around the Bellsprout and began to wrestle with it in a reckless manner.

"Is that a Submission attack?" asked Orange, somewhat impressed. "I didn't think a Psyduck could pull off such a move!"

"Chompy, use Growth!" said Violet.

"Bell... sproooooouuuut!" replied Chompy as its body began to increase in size, forcing Psyduck to let go. Then, without waiting for orders, the Bellsprout coiled its root-like body around Psyduck and began to squeeze hard. Frantically, Psyduck launched a stream of water from its bill, but the Water Gun failed to hit its target.

"Whoa, check it out!" Orange breathed. "What's going on with Chompy?" Violet's Pokédex spoke up, answering the question,

"Wrap," it said. "An attack involving the binding and squeezing of the opponent with one's long body, vines, or tentacles. Inflicts damage and temporarily immobilizes one's foe."

"Nice!" Violet exclaimed. "Chompy, you learned how to use Wrap! OK, keep it up!"

Red, however, was remembering how the Pokédex had mentioned Psyduck's mysterious powers. At the same time, he couldn't help but notice that an ominous blue glow had appeared in Psyduck's eyes- the sort of glow he'd come to associate with the usage of the Confusion attack.

"Violet, look out," he warned, "I think it's about to use-"

"DUUUUUUUUUCK!" screamed Psyduck suddenly, blasting Chompy with a ray of blue light, forcing the Bellsprout to relinquish its grip and throwing it through the air, where it landed at Violet's feet, struggling to get back up.

"...Confusion," Red finished lamely.

"Chompy, are you OK?" asked Violet.

"Sproooout..." moaned Chompy as the Bellsprout unsteadily climbed to its root feet.

"So what's the deal with this thing, anyway?" asked Orange. "What, is it Water and Psychic?"

"No, just Water," said Red. "Professor Oak told me that a Psyduck's psychic powers are more potent when its headache was worse. I'm guessing that Wrap attack didn't do much for its headache."

"Didn't even think of that," muttered Violet. "Chompy, let's try Sleep Powder!"

"Sproooooout," replied Chompy as it exhaled a cloud of glittering blue dust from its mouth. Psyduck's eyelids began to droop as the powder settled all around it. Finally, the Duck Pokémon slumped to the ground, snoring softly.

Wasting no time, Violet pulled a Poké Ball out of her fanny pack, enlarged it, and threw it. "Go, Poké Ball!" she shouted as she did this. The ball whizzed through the air, and once it struck the sleeping Psyduck, split open. At the same time, Psyduck was turned into a shapeless mass of translucent red energy, which was then sucked into the open ball. The Poké Ball snapped shut and hit the ground, whereupon it began to rock back and forth. Violet held her breath, her eyes focused upon the wiggling sphere, as if convinced here persistent glare would help keep it shut.

Finally, after what felt like an eternity, the ball emitted a single pinging sound and fell still. Violet exhaled and scooped up the Poké Ball. "I caught Psyduck! Yes!" she exclaimed.

"Nice," said Orange, grinning.

"Congratulations, Violet," added Red. "What are you gonna name it?"

"Migraine," she responded. "I know that once it evolves into Golduck, it won't have a headache anymore, but by that time, its psychic powers will be intense enough that it could give its opponents headaches if it wanted to."

"Clever," replied Red, clearly impressed.

"Or, you're just too lazy to think of a name that would suit it as a Golduck," chimed in Orange.

"Orange?" sighed Violet exasperatedly.

"Wh-Ohhhhhhh, no, no, no, you do not!" Orange exclaimed suddenly. "Don't think I haven't noticed this, Vi. You want me to go 'What?' so you can tell me to shut up, like you always do. Well, not this time! You know what I'm gonna do? I'm gonna just stay quiet and not answer you!" As if to prove his point, Orange slammed his mouth closed, and gave Violet a very smug grin. Violet raised her eyebrows at this, but did not question his logic.

"Come on," she said to Orange and Red as she withdrew Chompy. "We keep walking now, we should get to Ruceelna before nightfall." With that, she led the way, Orange still smirking smugly, mouth tightly shut. Within minutes, however, Orange's smug demeanor slowly gave way to a look of dawning comprehension.

"Hey, wait a minute!" shouted Orange suddenly. "That's not fair!"

"Took you long enough to figure that out, Orange," laughed Violet. "Mind you, I'm not complaining. The silence was a nice change of pace."

"Change of pace!?" repeated Orange indignantly. "Are you implying that I talk too much? Huh? Are you saying I talk too much? Red, do I talk too much?"

Red jumped slightly, clearly not having expected to have to participate in this conversation. "Well... I... Uh..." he stammered. Fortunately for him, Orange was far too impatient to wait for a coherent answer.

"There, you see?" he said to Violet. "Red doesn't think I'm too talkative. If he was, he'd have said something." Violet facepalmed.

"So, yeah, about training for the next Gym?" Red prompted Violet.

"Red, I thought you'd want to rush through this region as fast as possible, though," Orange said in surprise. "Don't you wanna get to Bincanar Island as quick as possible, get some answers, and get home?"

"I do," Red assured him. "But truth be told, I find Tanko to be fascinating. I do want to go home, but I figure as long as I'm here, why not make the most of it?"

"That's a good attitude to have, Red," Violet said, smiling approvingly.

"You're still not used to some of the Pokémon here, though, are ya?" asked Orange. "When are you gonna start warming up to .4 and Q and-"

"When you start warming up to Paras and Caterpie," retorted Red. This shut Orange up. Violet was quick to notice this, and smiled at Red. Orange saw this, and it seemed to further annoy him.
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Not much later, Violet voiced the notion that they should all take a break for a little while. Red, whose legs were starting to ache from the constant walking, combined with the previous bout of rock climbing, was more than happy to agree with this. Orange, on the other hand, was not so obliging.

"Come on, guys!" he whined. "I thought we were gonna try to get to Ruceelna City before nightfall!"

"Orange, relax, we're making good time," said Violet. "We can afford a short break. Why don't we let our Pokémon out, let them relax too?"

"Sounds like a plan," replied Red as he threw three Poké Balls into the air. "Charmeleon, Rattata, Paras, come on out!"

"Chompy, Flutters, Migraine, let's go!" added Violet as she launched her three Poké Balls.

"Q, .4, Spearow, LM4, we might as well," sighed Orange, who seemed to finally accept that Violet and Red weren't about to listen to his constant whining any time soon.

With a great display of dazzling white light, the ten Pokémon materialized. Charmeleon stood a fair distance from the rest of them, arms folded, and Spearow began to fly in large circles over everyone's heads, but the rest of the Pokémon began to interact with one another eagerly. Migraine, however, didn't seem too interested in talking; LM4 approached the Duck Pokémon and began to talk to it, but its responses of "Psy? Duck?" were apparently not what the Water/Fighting-type was hoping to hear, as it flopped away shortly afterwards.

"I'm so bored," whined Orange. "Why can't we keep going?"

"You don't want to rest a little bit, Orange?" asked Red, who was currently seated upon what appeared to be an aluminum tree stump. "That climb wasn't exactly easy."

"Red's right, Orange," added Violet. "We can't just wear ourselves out with constant physical activity, it's not healthy. We got to take it easy every once in a- Q, what is it?"

For at that moment, the Deep Sea Pokémon had floated over to the trio (Red, who hadn't seen it coming, tumbled backwards in shock, falling off his stump). "Kyuuu, kyuuu," it said, its voice full of urgency.

"It's trying to tell us something," observed Orange as Q motioned in the direction of the other Pokémon. The group looked at the Pokémon, trying to figure out what was wrong, when Violet suddenly gasped.

"Migraine's gone!" she exclaimed. "We have to find him!" Immediately, Red and Orange ran over to their Pokémon.

"Charmeleon, Paras, Rattata, any of you see where Migraine went?" asked Red.

"Char?" replied Charmeleon in a confused voice.

"Parrrras?" added Paras, seeming to be equally confused.

"Rattata?" chimed in Rattata.

"The Psyduck! Violet's Psyduck," said Red. "Which way did the Psyduck go?"

Charmeleon merely shrugged, while Rattata shook its head. Paras, however, gave a call of "Par! Paras!" and began scuttling off.

".4, go and search for the Psyduck from the air!" Orange was saying as Red called out.

"Guys, come on! Paras saw which way Migraine went!"

Immediately, Violet and Orange withdrew the rest of their Pokémon, only for Orange to realize Spearow had evaded the ball's beam; it was instead flying alongside .4.

"Red, check it out!" exclaimed Orange. "Spearow's looking for Migraine along with .4!"

"That's cool and all, but come on!" Violet said urgently. Paras saw which way my Psyduck went, we're following it!"

Though clearly reluctant to follow a Bug-type, Orange nevertheless took off after Red and Violet, both of whom were keeping close behind Paras, who was scuttling along the rocky, grassy, muddy, metallic, wet landscape as fast as its legs would carry it. After several minutes of this, however, Paras had lost the trail.

"Never mind, Paras," said Red consolingly as he held out its Poké Ball. "You did great. Take a rest."

Once Paras was back in its ball, an agitated chattering noise could be heard as .4 zipped up to Orange.

".4, you found Migraine?" said Orange. In response, .4 gibbered unintelligibly, zipped three times around Orange's head, and took off in a different direction. The trio gave chase, though not without difficulty; in order to follow .4, they had to navigate their way around a lot of strange rock formation/tree combinations and several odd tree-like structures that seemed to be made entirely of drywall and machine parts. After a few minutes, they came to a small clearing, with two identically dressed men in dreadfully similar white uniforms, each one with a green D emblazoned on the shirt.

"Team Debug!" exclaimed Orange, Red, and Violet simultaneously. At this, the two men wheeled around. Red could now see two steel cages on the ground behind the men- one contained Migraine, the other had Orange's Spearow.

"You twerps again!" exclaimed one of the men, who Red recognized from Ivadirin Forest.

"You're that bunch from Ivadirin Forest!" said Violet. "Give back my Psyduck!"

"And my Spearow!" Orange added.

"I'm afraid we can't do that, kiddies," said the other grunt, who Red recognized as Lou. "You see, if we're gonna thwart Team Error, we need all the extra Pokémon we can get our hands on- OW!" he exclaimed, for his associate, Will, had slapped him.

"You idiot!" roared Will. "When are you gonna stop revealing our plans to non-Debug personnel?!"

"Oh, relax, we can take 'em," said Lou as he readied a Poké Ball. "Mankey, let's go!"

"Tangela, you too!" Lou added, throwing a Poké Ball of his own.

In twin flashes of light, Mankey and Tangela materialized. Both Pokémon narrowed their eyes, recognizing their opponents.

"Let's do this," announced Red as he threw a Poké Ball. "Paras, I choose you!"

"Chompy, let's go!" added Violet, throwing her own Poké Ball.

Both Paras and the Bellsprout Chompy appeared before their respective trainers, facing their foes defiantly.

"Tangela, Constrict!" called Lou.

"Mankey, Mega Punch!" Will ordered.

"Chompy, use Wrap on Mankey!" said Violet.

"Paras, use Leech Life on Tangela!" commanded Red.

Tangela made the first move, extending a pair of teal vines from the tangled mass that was its body. Paras scuttled out of the way, then lunged at Tangela and bit one of its vines. Tangela gave a squeal of pain and tried to shake the Bug and Grass-type off, but Paras held on tight. Mankey, meanwhile, attempted to slam its fist into the Bellsprout, but Chompy merely wrapped its body around its foe once it got close enough.

"Enough of this!" Will said angrily. "Mankey, use Swift!"

Mankey screeched angrily as it unleashed a cluster of glowing star-shaped fragments of energy from its nose. The stars maneuvered through the air, returning to strike Chompy with excellent precision, causing the Bellsprout to loosen its grip momentarily. Seizing the opportunity, Manky wrenched its right arm free and executed Mega Punch, slamming Chompy to the ground. At the same time, Tangela used the vine Paras was sucking energy from to unleash its Slam attack. Paras was forced to let go as it was slammed against the ground, and it landed next to Chompy, who was struggling to get back up.

"Come on, guys," said Red quietly, desperately. Then, a stream of water struck Mankey squarely in the back, while a brown-and-red blur crashed into Tangela.

"Wh- Orange?!" exclaimed Violet. At this, Will and Lou wheeled around. There, standing triumphantly beside a pair of opened and vacant steel cages, was Orange. Q was floating by his side, and as they watched, Spearow landed on his shoulder. Migraine, meanwhile, waddled back to Violet as fast as it could.

"Little tip for you," said Orange, a smug look on his face. "You might want to consider cages with a more reliable lock. Q barely had to do anything to get it open."

"Kyuuu..." Q murmured modestly.

"Spear! Spearow!" cawed Spearow angrily, glaring at the Team Debug grunts.

"That abomination again! It's hideous!" exclaimed Lou as he pointed at Q. "Come on, Will, let's take it out! Tangela, Skull Bash now!"

"Mankey, use Thrash!" added Will.

Orange turned to face the Spearow on his shoulder and gave it a small smile, which Red could have sworn the Spearow had returned. "Use Razor Wind," Orange said simply. Immediately, Spearow took off and flapped its wings rapidly, unleashing a blast of air at Tangela and Mankey, both of whom screeched in pain.

"It obeyed him!" said Red. "Spearow's listening to Orange now!"

"Probably because Orange went to the trouble to save it," remarked Violet. "Though come to think of it, that little speech of his back in Moon Canyon, I'm willing to bet Spearow was moved by it."

"Spearow, let's finish it! Take Down now!" called Orange.

"Speeeeeeeeeeaaarrrowww!" screeched Spearow as it dove down at Mankey and Tangela, plowing them into their respective trainers. Knowing that this was probably the best time to cut their losses and leave while they still could, Will and Lou withdrew their Pokémon and fled into the woods.

"This isn't over, twerps!" roared Lou. "This isn't over!!"

"Nice going, Orange," said Red as everyone withdrew their Pokémon. "You finally got Spearow to listen to you, and you saved Migraine."

"Yeah... thanks," added Violet, albeit somewhat reluctantly, a fact that Orange was quick to pick up on.

"You really hate the fact that I did something right, don't you?" laughed Orange. "You're happiest when you get to argue with me and tell me to shut up and stuff, aren't you?"

"No," scoffed Violet. "It's just that you doing things right and saving the day, it's a new concept to me. I'm gonna have to get used to it."

"Whatever, let's get moving," said Orange.

"Yeah, we might as well," conceded Red. "Especially if there's more Team Debug goons in the area."

"Good point," Violet admitted. The trio began walking again, managing to make their way out of the grove of rock/drywall/machine part trees with little issue. As it turned out, however, their little detour had taken them quite a distance, and it was therefore not very long before the skyline of a city came into view, all the buildings appearing to be made of pieces of fence, odd numbers, gravel, and various pieces of landscaping. Some buildings seemed to have pools of water built into walls, with the surfaces seeming to be completely vertical, which, as far as Red knew, defied the laws of physics.

"We're here," said Orange. "Ruceelna City!

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 9.

Knightfall
27th June 2012, 5:03 PM
Another chapter? Alright then.

Nice scene with Psyduck, I've always had a liking for them and his evolution. He'll come in handy for the next gym me thinks.

Team Debug, when will you learn to go ahead and spend a little extra money on stronger cages?

I'm still on my vacation, so this post will have to end now. Great chapter.

Knightfall signing off... ;005;

Missingno. Master
27th June 2012, 5:10 PM
Nice scene with Psyduck, I've always had a liking for them and his evolution. He'll come in handy for the next gym me thinks.
Well, next Gym is Water-type, so... You're probably thinking of Bincanar and Ivadirin Gyms. Though, you just might be right anyway.


Team Debug, when will you learn to go ahead and spend a little extra money on stronger cages?
In their defense, their salary sucks.


I'm still on my vacation, so this post will have to end now. Great chapter.
Thanks, and enjoy your vacation!

Z-nogyroP
27th June 2012, 10:02 PM
Nice chapter! I love Psyduck, Misty's was what got me to love it. And I'm kinda meh about Spearow obeying Orange. On one hand, I like they finally formed a bond. On the other hand, there isn't gonna be any more comical scenes of Orange's Pokemon attacking him. Or will there be?

Great chapter as always, keep it up!

Jonah the Slaking
28th June 2012, 12:53 AM
Woot! Spearow listens to Orange now! And I'm smelling a bit of character development for our little redheaded friend!

I'm not particularly fond of Psyduck, but at least it has Psychic swag without the typing. Still, though, I prefer Staryu and Slowpoke (who can learn Flamethrower :3).

Missingno. Master
28th June 2012, 9:48 PM
Nice chapter! I love Psyduck, Misty's was what got me to love it.
Thanks! I like Psyduck, too, mainly for the same reason. Migraine won't be as big a headache to train as Misty's Psyduck, but trust me, there'll still be issues.


And I'm kinda meh about Spearow obeying Orange. On one hand, I like they finally formed a bond. On the other hand, there isn't gonna be any more comical scenes of Orange's Pokemon attacking him. Or will there be?
It's a distinct possibility.


Great chapter as always, keep it up!
Thanks!


Woot! Spearow listens to Orange now! And I'm smelling a bit of character development for our little redheaded friend!
Don't get too used to it. :) The character development for Orange, I mean, not Spearow listening to him- that, you should get used to.


I'm not particularly fond of Psyduck, but at least it has Psychic swag without the typing. Still, though, I prefer Staryu and Slowpoke (who can learn Flamethrower :3).
Actually, Slowpoke can't learn Flamethrower in this fanfic. It goes by Generation I everything, and Slowpoke couldn't learn Flamethrower until Crystal version. And if you like Water/Psychic-types, there's always Orange's Q. And the 7g used by Team Error won't be the only one to show up.

UltimatePokemonExpert
28th June 2012, 10:14 PM
Yes, I love Psyducks!

Moonlight Amaryllis
29th June 2012, 9:43 PM
Why I no get a PM about this? Well, Migraine's capture was unexpected, as well as Team Debug's appearance. Still can't decide if their doing what's right or not. Spearow is one of my favourite Flying-Types, but can they learn Take Down and Razor Wind? I don't think so. Or is this another old-old-game refrence? Damn. I would buy myself Emerald, but its all collectible now. Hope Migraine becomes useful in future chapters.

Missingno. Master
30th June 2012, 3:21 AM
Yes, I love Psyducks!
Pretty cool, aren't they?


Why I no get a PM about this?
OK, remember when I said I'd add you to the PM list? Turns out I didn't. Sorry about that. I've just added you now, so you'll definitely get a PM for the next chapter.


Spearow is one of my favourite Flying-Types, but can they learn Take Down and Razor Wind? I don't think so. Or is this another old-old-game refrence?

They can learn Take Down and Razor Wind through TMs in R/B/Y, which is what this fic takes all move compatibility from. It's not the first time, either, remember Tangela's Skull Bash? Rattata's Water Gun? Rhyhorn's Bide? Psyduck's Submission?

I've started the next chapter, but haven't gotten to the battling parts yet. The chapter can reasonably be expected some time next week, maybe this weekend (big, big, huge maybe).

Missingno. Master
30th June 2012, 3:35 PM
Chapter 10: Walter, Water, Everywhere
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The sun was starting to set as the group made their way down the streets of Ruceelna City. At one point, Red noticed a large stone archway in the middle of a street that seemed to be paved with threes, fours, and bricks. To his confusion, Orange and Violet walked around the arch, though it was definitely tall enough for them to walk through.

"Hey, guys, why'd you walk around this arch? It's- agh!" Red exclaimed, for as he was speaking, he walked under the archway, and immediately found that both of his feet were suddenly stuck firmly to the road. Red managed to not fall over, having nearly lost his balance, but simply could not budge his feet an inch.

"Hmm? Red!" exclaimed Violet as she and Orange wheeled around at the sound of his voice. Together, they walked over to Red, each one taking one of his arms, and they yanked hard. With a loud popping sound, Red's feet were pulled free, and the trio fell to the ground.

"Ow," groaned Red as they climbed back to their feet. "What the hell was that?"

"A freeze arch," replied Violet. "They're these stone archways that immobilize anyone who steps through them. You don't have those in Kanto?"

"Nothing even remotely close to them," said Red, looking back at the innocent-looking structure warily, as though fearful that it would suddenly come to life and attack them. "Are there many of these in Tanko?"

"A fair few," said Orange. "Each major city has at least one or two, though they can sometimes be found on routes. They're easy enough to spot, though. I got stuck in one when I was five, back when I lived in Miliovern City. My dad was close by, luckily, so he pulled me out no problem."

"Miliovern City?" repeated Red, frowning. "Wait... How do you spell that? M-I-L-I-O-V-E-R-N?"

"Yeah, why- ohhhh, I see," said Orange. "You rearrange those letters, you get the name of a city in Kanto, right?"

"Vermilion City," nodded Red. "I'm guessing Miliovern is south of here?"

"Right," nodded Violet. "Just past Fansfor City. Which is spelled F-A-N-S-F-O-R, by the way."

"Thought so," nodded Red. "That would correlate to Saffron City in Kanto."

"This is kinda cool," chuckled Orange. "I mean, for years, I've only known of Kanto as an urban legend, a myth about some parallel universe. And now I know, not only is it real, but its city names are the same as ours, just with the letters all scrambled. Well, c'mon, guys, we better get to the Pokémon Center before it gets dark." With that, he took off, running down the street.

"So, Violet," said Red, "Why don't people just take down those freeze arches?"

"They're indestructible," Violet answered. "Nothing in existence can so much as scratch those things. Someone once tried to destroy a freeze arch by telling their 'M to hit it with Take Down, but nothing happened. And 'M have really high attack power, there's not much that can withstand a physical attack from one of those.

Curious, Red took out his Pokédex at the mention of 'M. On the screen appeared an image of a large, rectangular Pokémon, white with black, orange, and purple markings all over. Jutting out from one side was a smaller rectangle with vague facial features.

"'M, the Shoreline Pokémon," droned the Pokédex. "'M thrive in coastal areas, though are not particularly adept swimmers. It flies through the air with style and grace, and hits with the force of a freight train."

"Guys! Come on!" exclaimed Orange, having finally realized his two companions were moving a lot slower than he was. For some reason, judging by the look on his face, this seemed to annoy him more than usual.

Violet sighed. "Yeah, yeah. Come on, Red."
~~~~~~~~

Ten minutes later, the trio walked through the double doors made entirely of pencil shavings and entered the Pokémon Center. The nurse greeted them warmly and was more than happy to tend to their Pokémon.

"So," said Red as they waited for their Pokémon to heal up, "What type does the Ruceelna Gym Leader use anyway?"

"Water-types, I think," replied Violet. "Chompy should do fine in this one."

"That's what you said about Rewept Gym, though," observed Orange. "And as I recall, Chompy got one-hit KO'd by Bide."

"Orange?" said Violet.

"Yes?"

"Shut up.

"Water-types, huh?" said Red. "Looks like I'll be trying out Paras here."

"Does it know any Grass moves?" asked Orange.

"Lemme check," replied Red as he took his Pokédex in one hand and Paras's Poké Ball in the other. "OK, Paras's moves... Leech Life... Stun Spore... Scratch."

"Well, at least it's still resistant to Water moves," Violet said.

"Yeah, yeah, yeah," Orange said. "OK, I got nothing that's especially good against Water-types, but Q and LM4 can at least let me go with the same kind of stuff the leader will be using."

"Huh... that's actually a good point," said Violet, sounding very surprised to be saying such a thing to Orange. "Well, maybe I can use Migraine as well, then."

"All healed!" the nurse said suddenly, as she approached the trio with three trays full of Poké Balls.

"Ah, thanks," said Red as he took his Poké Balls and attached them to his belt. Orange and Violet did likewise, and then the group walked off towards the cafeteria for dinner. Red enjoyed a fiveburger with eight sauce; Orange happily wolfed down a nine casserole; and Violet had an even number salad. After this, the nurse showed them to their room, where a tired Red flopped down onto his bed and fell asleep at once. Not even the inhuman cacophony that was Orange's snoring could awaken him.

At least, not until five o'clock the next morning.

Red woke up to the earsplitting noises Orange was emitting and groaned upon noticing the clock.

"I need earplugs," he groaned as he tossed and turned in his bed, trying to block out the noise with no success. After several minutes of this, however, Red gave up the attempt and climbed out of bed. At that moment, however, Violet yawned as she awoke. Casually, she pulled out her earplugs, walked over to Orange, and slapped him with her pillow, waking him up.

"Zzzz-hmm?! What?! Huh?!" exclaimed Orange as he woke up abruptly.

"I really need a pair of earplugs," said Red, shaking his head.

"Here, take these," replied Violet as she pulled another pair out of her pants pocket and tossed them to Red, who barely caught them. "I keep extra pairs on me just in case."

"Geez, Vi," grumbled Orange. "You act like I snore really loudly or something like that.

"Maybe because, oh, I don't know, you do?" Violet replied sarcastically. "Did you think I wear these earplugs to keep my ears warm?"

"Yeah, whatever, let's eat and get to the Gym," said Orange.

"Orange, it's five in the morning," said Red. "You really think the Gym's gonna be open that early?"

"It's worth a shot, at least," shrugged Orange. "Come on, Red, Vi."

As the trio entered the main lobby of the Pokémon Center, they noticed that it didn't seem closed at all. All the lights were still on, and the cafeteria was still open.

"Knew this'd still be open," said Orange as they took seats around a small table in the cafeteria. "Pokémon Centers run 24/7, because you never know when a trainer's gonna come in from a late-night training session, or some sort of sudden emergency or something."

At that moment, a Chansey had noticed the trio and came waddling right over, ready to take their orders.

"Fried nines, please," said Orange.

"Make that two," Red added. "Those are good." At this, Orange grinned and high-fived Red.

"A small bowl of fresh sixes for me, please," said Violet. Chansey nodded as it scribbled down their orders, then walked away.

"You know, one of these days, Orange," Violet said, "You're gonna get tired of having fried nines every morning."

"Yeah, sure," scoffed Orange. "I'll start ordering something different when that happens, no problem. If that happens, anyway."

"They are pretty good, Violet," said Red.

"She wouldn't know, though," Orange said. "She's an evenetarian."

"Come again?"

"An evenetarian," repeated Orange. "She only eats even numbers."

"Orange, if I've told you once I've told you a hundred times," sighed Violet. "I am not an evenetarian. Evenetarians eat only even numbers because they choose to. I only eat even numbers because I don't like how odd numbers taste."

"You're still an evenetarian," said Orange stubbornly.

"I am not."

"You are too."

"Am not!"

"Are too!"

"Am not!"

"Are too!"

"Am not!"

"Are too!"

"Am too!"

"Are not!"

"Am too!"

"No, you are not!" declared Orange. "You are most certainly not an evenetarian and that is final!!"

"Whatever you say," shrugged Violet.

"You're darn right, whatever I say," grinned Orange. Then, as he sat there, his grin slowly gave way to an annoyed expression. "Hey, wait a minute!" he exclaimed suddenly, at which point both Red and Violet started laughing.

"Sorry, Orange," chuckled Red. "But that was hilarious."

At that moment, however, Chansey returned to the table with their meals. Red and Orange happily started in on their fried nines, while Violet picked up a spoon and started to slowly scoop the small sixes out of the bowl and into her mouth.

Once they were done eating and Chansey had scanned their Pokédexes to confirm that they were trainers, Red, Orange, and Violet exited the Pokémon Center and began to walk down the street.

"OK, if I remember the nurse's directions correctly, the Gym should be right around here," stated Orange as he looked around. "Not much farther-aha!" he added in triumph as he pointed down the road, having only just spotted the large structure at the end of it.

The building was massive, constructed from what appeared to be large concrete bricks, pieces of wooden fence, various shrubberies, and a bunch of ones and threes. In the very front, where a set of doors ought to have been, there was instead a large wall of water. As Orange and Violet continued to walk towards it, Red stopped, confused.

"Where's the door?" he asked.

"Right here," replied Orange as he walked right through the wall of water as if it was absolutely nothing. Violet followed with similar results. After taking a moment to stare at the strange entrance, Red tentatively walked through the wall of water. Oddly, it didn't feel a thing like water; indeed, it felt as though a cool breeze was blowing on Red's body from above, like from an air conditioner.

The inside of Ruceelna Gym was brightly lit. The floor, ceiling, and walls were all white, with numerous windows near the ceiling letting in large amounts of sunlight. Most notably, in the middle of the room, there was a large swimming pool built into the floor, with two large, white floating platforms bobbing in place. Then, Red could see someone at the other end of the pool. A teenage boy, looking somewhat older than Orange. His head was covered in unkempt blond hair, and he was wearing only a pair of blue swimming trunks. His exposed torso showed obvious muscle.

"Hey, what's up, dudes?" called the youth. "Welcome to Ruceelna Gym! I'm, like, Walter, the Gym Leader."

"Hi, Walter," breathed Violet, sounding as though she was extraordinarily pleased to make his acquaintance. "I'm Violet Scramble from Talpel Town, and I came to challenge you to a battle!"

"Ahem," butted in Orange, sounding very annoyed. "I'm Orange McPixel, also from Talpel Town, and would like to remind Violet that she is not your only challenger today!"

"Red Vershunn, also from Talpel Town," added Red. "Also here for a battle."

"Right, dudes," nodded Walter as he took his place at the far end of the pool. "I can only battle, like, one of you at a time, so, how about I battle the pretty girl first?" At this, Violet blushed and giggled.

"Heh heh... Fine by me!" she said.

"Two Pokémon each sound cool to you?" called Walter.

"You're the boss," replied Violet.

"Right on," he grinned as he reached for a nearby duffel bag and pulled out a Poké Ball. As he threw it, he shouted, "Let's go, Tentacool!"

In a flash of light, a small, blue Pokémon materialized in the water. Its blue body was vaguely bell-shaped, and possessed two very large red dots, with one smaller red dot between the two. A pair of gray tentacles could be seen coming out of the bottom. Violet took out her Pokédex and aimed it at her opponent.

"Tentacool, the Jellyfish Pokémon. Tentacool drifts in shallow seas. Fishermen who hook it by accident are punished by its stinging acid."

"OK, let's get started!" said Violet as she threw a Poké Ball. "Chompy, I choose you!"

The ball burst open to unleash Violet's Bellsprout, who expertly landed on the floating platform closer to Violet's end of the pool. "Bellsprout, sprout," said Chompy.

"Tentacool, Skull Bash!" called Walter.

"Chompy, Wrap it!" ordered Violet.

With surprising speed, Tentacool sprung out of the water, lunging at Chompy. The Bellsprout, however, merely stretched out its root-lke body and bound it tightly around the oncoming Tentacool.

"We got it now," said Violet. "Tighter, Chompy!"

"Tentacool, like, use Acid!" Walter commanded.

"Cool," replied Tentacool in a slightly nasally voice as it aimed one of its tentacles at Chompy and unleashed a blast of purple liquid from the tip. Chompy screamed as the Acid made contact, and involuntarily released Tentacool.

"Alright, little dude, way to go!" Walter congratulated his Pokémon. "Now, let's show them what, like, a real Wrap attack looks like!"

"Tentacool, Tentacool," chanted Tentacool as it wound its tentacles tightly around Chompy, immobilizing the Bellsprout.

"Use Growth now!" Violet ordered.

"Sprooooooooooooout!" bellowed Chompy as its body took on a greenish aura and began to double in size. A surprised Tentacool was practically forced to let go.

"Whoa, dude," murmured Walter.

"Vine Whip attack!" continued Violet.

"Bellsprout, sprout!" replied Chompy as it extended a pair of thick vines from behind its leaves and smacked Tentacool clear across the pool with them. The Jellyfish Pokémon skidded to a stop on the opposite platform, unconscious.

"Impressive," grinned Walter as he withdrew Tentacool. "Usually, like, Tentacool's good for taking out at least one Pokémon, you know? I've won entire battles just using it."

"It's very well-trained, though," Violet said quickly.

"Well, you thought that was something, you ain't seen my best yet!" said Walter as he produced a second Poké Ball and launched it. "LM4, go!"

In a flash of light, the Poké Ball unleashed an LM4 into the pool. It looked rather identical to Orange's, if not somewhat larger.

"Four four LM4!" it exclaimed as it began to swiftly swim laps around the pool.

"OK, Chompy, try to hit it with Vine Whip!" ordered Violet.

"LM4, like, dodge it!" Walter called out.

Chompy's vines plunged into the water and flailed about, but LM4 deftly evaded each and every attack.

"OK, now, like, hit it with Quick Attack!" said Walter.

"Fooooooouuurr!!" bellowed LM4 as it leapt out of the water and rammed into Chompy's back, sending it into the pool.

"Chompy, get out of there!" exclaimed Violet.

"Aurora Beam!" exclaimed Walter.

As Chompy flailed about in the water in a pathetic attempt to swim to the nearest platform, LM4 unleashed the Ice-type move at point-blank range. The rainbow-colored ray sent Chompy flying out of the pool and crashing down on the platform as it slowly shrunk back down to its original size.

"OK, LM4's a Fighting-type," muttered Violet as she withdrew Chompy. "I think I got an idea!" She then threw another ball. "I choose you, Migraine!"

The ball opened up and unleashed the Psyduck into the open. Migraine landed in the water and began to swim around, eyeing its opponent with its trademark blank look as it climbed onto the platform.

"LM4, like, use ThunderPunch!" exclaimed Walter.

"L M!" replied LM4 as what appeared to be a fist covered in the same patterns as the rest of its body sprouted out of its top side and crackled with electricity. LM4 then zoomed through the water, preparing to leap out at Migraine.

"Migraine, Confusion attack!" called Violet.

"Psy?" was the Psyduck's response as it turned around and tilted its head, obviously not having understood the order.

"Migraine! Come on, I know you know that move!" Violet exclaimed. "Migraine, look out!"

"Psy? DUCK!" exclaimed Migraine as it looked back just in time to see LM4's electrified fist make contact with its gut.

"What's wrong with Migraine?" wondered Red out loud as LM4 retracted its fist. Orange, who didn't seem especially keen on watching the match, merely shrugged.

Meanwhile, the battle wasn't going so well for Violet. Following Migraine's failure to use Confusion, Violet decided to stick with its other attacks, but its Water Gun was overpowered by LM4's BubbleBeam easily.

"Migraine, Submission!" said Violet.

"LM4, like, Wrap!" ordered Walter.

Immediately, a pair of tentacles unraveled themselves from LM4's sides and wound their way around Migraine's torso, squeezing it tightly.

"Let's end this- Rolling Kick!" he ordered.

"Migraine, Water Gun!" Violet cried. It was no good, however- LM4 pulled Migraine in close and slammed a newly-grown foot right into Migraine's head.

"Violet, there's still a chance!" Red exclaimed. "Remember the last time Migraine used Confusion?"

"Right- its headache!" exclaimed Violet as Migraine's eyes took on a blue glow. "A Rolling Kick to the head would give anything a headache! Migraine, use your Confusion attack!"

"Psy..." droned the Psyduck as it unleashed a ray of blue light from its eyes. LM4 screeched horribly as the super effective move made contact, and released its hold on Migraine. The Bubble Cube Pokémon floated on the surface of the water, unmoving.

"Whoa!" exclaimed Walter as he withdrew LM4. "Like, you totally blew me away! Awesome battle." At that point, he reached into his duffel bag, pulled out a blue disc and a small, glittering blue object, then leapt into the pool and swiftly swam over to Violet.

"That was cool," giggled Violet as Walter climbed out of the pool. Orange rolled his eyes.

"Thanks," smiled Walter as he held out the glittering object- small and blue, in the shape of a tidal wave. "Here you go- the Drench Badge. You've totally earned it." As Violet accepted it, he then offered the blue disc. Oh, and here's TM11- it teaches BubbleBeam."

"Thank you," said Violet as Walter went back in the water and swam back to his side.

"Alright, which one of you dudes wants to go next?" he called.

"I'll go," voluteered Red.

"Oh no, you don't," said Orange suddenly, stepping up to the pool. "I'll battle you next!"

Walter shrugged. "Whatever, little dude. Let me heal my Pokémon first." With that, he took both his Poké Balls and placed them on a machine in the back of the room, identical to the one Minerva used back in Rewept Gym. After a few seconds, he took the Poké Balls back and faced Orange. He placed one ball back in the nearby duffel bag and threw the other one. "Tentacool, go!"

The ball split open in midair, and Walter's Tentacool rematerialized in the water, looking as healthy as ever. "Tentacool, Tentacool," it said.

"Spearow," Orange exclaimed as he heaved a Poké Ball into the air, "I choose you!"

In a flash of light, Spearow appeared in midair, screeching loudly as it circled above the pool.

"OK, Tentacool, like, your target's, like, flying around and stuff," explained Walter. "We'll need to try, like, long-range attacks. Use BubbleBeam!"

"Tentacool!" squealed Tentacool as it unleashed a barrage of bubbles from the tips of its tentacles. Spearow, however, evaded them with ease.

"Spearow, Razor Wind attack!" ordered Orange.

"Speeeaaaaarrrowwww!" screeched Spearow as it flapped its wings furiously, sending a gust of razor-sharp air straight at Tentacool, who couldn't dive underwater quickly enough.

"Good job, Spearow, keep it up! Rapid-fire Razor Wind!" grinned Orange.

"Spea! Row! Spea! Row!" grunted Spearow with each flap of its wings, sending wave after wave of wind flying at Tentacool. Occasionally, Tentacool could attempt to block an oncoming Razor Wind with BubbleBeam, but the attack would always get popped by Razor Wind.

"OK, let's finish it! Take Down!" Orange ordered. Immediately, Spearow did a backflip in midair and dove down at Tentacool, who was too tired to try and dodge it. Skimming the surface of the pool with its talons, Spearow plowed Tentacool into the platform, though fell into the water briefly. As Walter withdrew Tentacool, Spearow got out of the water and flew over to the floating platform near Orange, though clearly had a hard time doing so; its feathers were drenched with water, making them much heavier than normal.

"Well done, little dude," remarked Walter. "But now let's see how you handle LM4!" he added as he threw the second Poké Ball, unleashing his Water/Fighting-type into the water.

"Spearow, it's a Fighting-type! Use Peck!" Orange exclaimed. Spearow flapped its wings rapidly, but only succeeding in spraying water in all directions.

"LM4, like, use Aurora Beam!" commanded Walter.

"Fooouur!" shouted LM4 as it unleashed the rainbow-colored attack. Spearow attempted to dodge it, but the flight back to the platform had worn it out too much to be able to get into the air, and the attack sent the soggy Spearow flying into its trainer's arms, clearly unfit for further battling.

"I'm sorry, Spearow," sighed Orange as he withdrew his Flying-type. "If I had just stuck with Razor Wind, you'd have been able to dodge Aurora Beam easily. But that's in the past," he continued as he readied another Poké Ball. "They say to fight fire with fire. Well, in this case, I'll fight Fighting with Fighting!" And he heaved the sphere into the air. "LM4, let's go!"

In a flash of light, Orange's LM4 materialized, landing in the pool. Now able to see the two side by side, Red realized that Orange's LM4 really was somewhat smaller than Walter's, but not by too much.

"Righteous, dude," grinned Walter. "You got an LM4 too! This is gonna, like, be really interesting. LM4, go! ThunderPunch now!"

"Use PoisonPowder!" Orange commanded as Walter's LM4 zipped through the water, electrified fist already at the ready. Orange's LM4 unleashed a plume of purple dust, which stopped its enemy cold. Walter's LM4 now had a purplish hue all over its body, and it was coughing.

"It's poisoned," remarked Red.

"Not bad, little dude," said Walter. "But try and beat our Quick Attack!"

"We'll use Quick Attack, too!" Orange replied. "Go, LM4!"

Simultaneously, the two LM4 darted through the water and collided in the middle. Walter's LM4, being larger, rammed Orange's LM4 hard, sending it crashing onto the floating platform.

"Come on, LM4, you can do it!" Orange exclaimed.

"Four... Four... FOOOOUUUUR!" bellowed Orange's LM4 suddenly as it stood on the floating platform and took on a bright glow. Orange's jaw dropped as LM4's body rounded out somewhat, and sprouted small arms, legs, and pointed ears. A tail and a pair of small wings grew out of its back as the glow faded, revealing a pale pink Pokémon to be standing in LM4's place.

"Did... LM4... But..." stammered Red.

"It evolved into Clefairy!" exclaimed Violet as Orange held out his Pokédex.

"Clefairy, the Fairy Pokémon, and the evolved form of LM4," droned Orange's Pokédex. "Exceptionally cute, Clefairy has many admirers. It is exceedingly rare and appears only in certain areas." As the Pokédex finished speaking, however, Orange's Clefairy began to glow once more. This time, the change in shape was much more drastic. Its small tail became large and thick. Its petite body grew drastically, and its ears became larger. Numerous spikes jutted out of various spots on its body, mainly its back and ears. As a large horn jutted out of its forehead, the glowing stopped, revealing a monstrous purple Pokémon, who roared loudly.

"Now that's more like it!" Orange exclaimed, holding his Pokédex out once again.

"Nidoking, the Drill Pokémon, droned the Pokédex. "Although it is the evolved form of Nidorino, when LM4 evolves into Clefairy, it will promptly evolve again into Nidoking. Nidoking possesses steel-like hide which functions much like armor. Its horn can pierce even diamonds, and its tail packs enough power to destroy concrete structures."

"Very cool," nodded Walter. "Here's the deal, though- Nidoking are, like, Ground-types, which is, like, weak to Water! How are you gonna deal with that?"

"See for yourself," said Orange, grinning widely. "Nidoking has one other move it knew since it was LM4, but I never had it use it before. Didn't really have an opportunity to, but now I do. Nidoking, TM05!"

Nidoking roared as it leapt into the water and, despite its weakness to it, swiftly swam towards LM4, but at the last second, changed direction and vanished into thin air.

"Whoa!" breathed Walter. "My LM4 didn't even learn that move yet! Awesome! LM4, be careful, it could come from anywhere!"

"Nidoking, Quick Attack!" Orange commanded.

With a sudden roar that seemed to come from nowhere, LM4 was suddenly slammed into the side of the pool as Nidoking rematerialized.

"LM4, BubbleBeam now!" called Walter.

"Not happening!" Orange declared. "Nidoking, finish it with Rolling Kick!"

As LM4 unleashed a barrage of bubbles, Nidoking leapt out of the water and expertly delivered a roundhouse kick, sending LM4 crashing into the back wall of the Gym, where it fell to the floor and moved no more.

"Wow," sighed Walter as he withdrew LM4. "Now, that was a battle, little dude." As he took another badge and TM out of his bag, Orange withdrew Nidoking, allowing Walter to swim across the pool, at which point he presented Orange with a Drench Badge and a TM11.

"Good battle, Orange," said Violet. At this, Orange grinned, and then stood back, allowing Red to take his place near the pool.

"OK! Red, right?" asked Walter.

Red nodded.

"Excellent!" Walter said happily. "Just let me heal my team and I'll be glad to battle you, dude."

"You ready, Red?" asked Orange.

"As I'll ever be," Red replied.

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 10.

Jonah the Slaking
30th June 2012, 4:53 PM
Can't help but notice that Violet has a thing for Walter. Whether it's Rule 63'd or not, someone always has to like Misty...

Anyway, that was awesome! I'm learning a lot about glitch Pokemon this way. I never would've thought LM4 evolved into Clefairy or Nidoking.

Wait...did I get first comment?! SLFDKJ:J

jeffdavid102
30th June 2012, 5:05 PM
What can I say? It was a great chapter, and the evolution was a bit weird, but I liked it. I thought, like, Nidoking was going to win with, like, a Thunderbolt. Like, who else thought that?

Missingno. Master
30th June 2012, 5:18 PM
Can't help but notice that Violet has a thing for Walter. Whether it's Rule 63'd or not, someone always has to like Misty...
Yep.


Anyway, that was awesome! I'm learning a lot about glitch Pokemon this way. I never would've thought LM4 evolved into Clefairy or Nidoking.
Glad you liked the chapter!


Wait...did I get first comment?! SLFDKJ:J
Why, yes. Yes, you did.


What can I say? It was a great chapter, and the evolution was a bit weird, but I liked it. I thought, like, Nidoking was going to win with, like, a Thunderbolt. Like, who else thought that?

Thanks! My initial plan was actually for Nidoking to learn Thunder, but I figured that would seem just a little too convenient.

Knightfall
30th June 2012, 8:27 PM
Great chapter.
Huh, I never knew LM4 evolved in such a way, cool.
Walter is interesting as a character, to may the least.
I knew Migraine would be useful at this gym. Finally one of my predictions were right.
Can't wait until the next chapter.

Knightfall signing off... ;005;

Z-nogyroP
30th June 2012, 9:25 PM
Well, I should have guessed it. Nidoking is officially Orange's first Poison-type! Hoorah! I believe the next gym is Lt. Surge, and Nidoking will come in handy there. After that, Erika, where, again, Nidoking will help, and then Koga... Man, Nidoking is a boss.

Why is it you always cut off the chapter before Red's battle?

Keep it up, although I wish Q made an appearance here. Oh well.

Missingno. Master
1st July 2012, 1:32 AM
Great chapter.
Thanks!


Huh, I never knew LM4 evolved in such a way, cool.
I have a Nidoking in Blue I evolved from an LM4. I don't actually use it, though, I only have it because I wanted to see for myself the whole LM4-Clefairy-Nidoking thing. When Clefairy evolves into Nidoking, though, it will still say "What? LM4 is evolving!", though. And if you keep it as a Clefairy, if memory serves, it will be nicknamed TM55.


Walter is interesting as a character, to may the least.
Kinda makes up for the painfully obvious pun name, doesn't it?


I knew Migraine would be useful at this gym. Finally one of my predictions were right.
Congrats on that.


Well, I should have guessed it. Nidoking is officially Orange's first Poison-type! Hoorah! I believe the next gym is Lt. Surge, and Nidoking will come in handy there. After that, Erika, where, again, Nidoking will help, and then Koga... Man, Nidoking is a boss.
Just remember that Fansfor Gym specializes in Psychic-types, so yeah.


Why is it you always cut off the chapter before Red's battle?
Gives at least one thing you know you can look forward to in the next chapter, though I think it'll be interesting nonetheless.


Keep it up, although I wish Q made an appearance here. Oh well.
Don't worry, there'll be plenty of times for Q to shine. I don't want to end up neglecting any of their Pokémon, like the anime writers neglect pretty much every Normal/Flying-type Ash comes to own. This way, it can honestly be said that all of Orange's Pokémon thus far have participated in at least one Gym battle, same with Violet. And yes, before you ask, the same will hold true for Red.

Obviously, it will be some time before the next chapter is done. I've barely even started yet. Plus, I'll be leaving on Thursday for the weekend, so if the chapter isn't up until then, don't expect it until the following week.

Z-nogyroP
1st July 2012, 3:25 PM
I don't want to end up neglecting any of their Pokémon, like the anime writers neglect pretty much every Normal/Flying-type Ash comes to own.

Don't forget about his Palpitoad. That thing was used in Nimbasa, and then didn't show up again until the frickin' EIGHTH GYM. Gah.

EDIT: Sorry about the spoiler. I just rage when something like that happens.

Missingno. Master
1st July 2012, 4:09 PM
Don't forget about his Palpitoad. That thing was used in Nimbasa, and then didn't show up again until the frickin' EIGHTH GYM. Gah.

I actually wasn't gonna mention that, as it kinda counts as spoilers, since the eighth gym episodes didn't air outside of Japan yet. But yeah, you're right.

Moonlight Amaryllis
2nd July 2012, 7:40 PM
I'm actually becoming rather amused with these chapter names. Mine suck.

Well, I was expecting worse with the whole Misty-being-a-guy thing, but it turned out better than I thought. But...seriously, a ValleyGirl, err, Guy? This is going to take some time getting used too. But seriously, LM4 evolve into Clefairy, then Nidoking?! WTF? Glitch Pokemon are way to weird. Aren't you supposed to charge when using Razor Wind? Wait, let me guess; in the original games, you didn't have to. Crap. Oh well, nice chapter, can't wait until Chapter 11.

Missingno. Master
2nd July 2012, 9:33 PM
I'm actually becoming rather amused with these chapter names. Mine suck.
Thanks! And I bet yours aren't that bad.


Well, I was expecting worse with the whole Misty-being-a-guy thing, but it turned out better than I thought. But...seriously, a ValleyGirl, err, Guy? This is going to take some time getting used too.
I was kinda going for more of a surfer dude kind of guy, but I'm starting to think I didn't quite nail it.


But seriously, LM4 evolve into Clefairy, then Nidoking?! WTF? Glitch Pokemon are way to weird.
Weird, yes, but awesome.


Aren't you supposed to charge when using Razor Wind? Wait, let me guess; in the original games, you didn't have to. Crap.
Oh, no, there was always the charge turn for Razor Wind. I just took a bit of a creative liberty with this one, like the anime did.


Oh well, nice chapter, can't wait until Chapter 11.
Thanks!

I haven't gotten very far with Chapter 11, though. It's doubtful it'll be out this week, but you never know.

ESPNfanatic35
4th July 2012, 6:10 AM
Nice, funny chapter as usual! Definitely the most interesting evolution chain I've ever seen. Love it!

I also enjoy the "righteous" Gym leader. It's cool that you're coming up with more originality for the leaders rather than just rehashing the same ones that everyone knows. Keep it up!

UltimatePokemonExpert
7th July 2012, 7:13 PM
That was a good chapter. I'm surprised Red didn't get weirded out be that evolution. Oh and M.M, are you planning on having a love interest for Red? It just seems weird that the main hero doesn't get any love when, let's face it, we all know Orange and Violet have a thing going on.

Missingno. Master
8th July 2012, 8:43 PM
Nice, funny chapter as usual! Definitely the most interesting evolution chain I've ever seen. Love it!

I also enjoy the "righteous" Gym leader. It's cool that you're coming up with more originality for the leaders rather than just rehashing the same ones that everyone knows. Keep it up!
Thanks!


That was a good chapter. I'm surprised Red didn't get weirded out be that evolution.
He did, though. It was only one line, so you might have missed it.


Oh and M.M, are you planning on having a love interest for Red? It just seems weird that the main hero doesn't get any love when, let's face it, we all know Orange and Violet have a thing going on.
Trust me, I got something in mind there.

I have a lot of work to do on the next chapter. It will likely be out late this week. Sometime next week at the very latest.

3D992
8th July 2012, 9:11 PM
I was thinking red and violet had something going. That way red would be torn on whether or not to go back to kanto. We'll see with time.

Missingno. Master
9th July 2012, 3:16 AM
I was thinking red and violet had something going. That way red would be torn on whether or not to go back to kanto. We'll see with time.

Well, you're definitely thinking. Whether you're thinking along the same lines as I am, will become known soon enough.

Eeveeon8
10th July 2012, 12:57 AM
Well, I didn't have the time to read, much less review the last two chapters. I know they're gonna be good. I Instapapered them. Anyways, isn't Red's sprite from HeartGold and SoulSilver the same as Red and Blue? And congrats! This game has encouraged me to download a rom of Yellow and perform any glitch I know of. I would have bought it but my 40 dollars are going to B/W 2, sadly.

Missingno. Master
12th July 2012, 4:32 PM
Well, I didn't have the time to read, much less review the last two chapters. I know they're gonna be good. I Instapapered them. Anyways, isn't Red's sprite from HeartGold and SoulSilver the same as Red and Blue? And congrats! This game has encouraged me to download a rom of Yellow and perform any glitch I know of. I would have bought it but my 40 dollars are going to B/W 2, sadly.

Well, though I can't really condone the downloading of ROMs as opposed to buying actual copies, I'm still glad I inspired you to work with glitches. Just a warning, if in the process of your glitch performing, you come across some real glitchy trainer and almost all of your Pokémon get turned into impossibly leveled Bulbasaur that know Explosion and don't listen to you... don't save.

On the subject of the next chapter, I'm afraid I never had the time to work on it this week, and I have several semi-adequate reasons for it.

1: Black 2 and White 2 came out, and I've been trying like crazy to get a bunch of the now-available Unova Pokémon with their Hidden Abilities over the GTS, preferably females, for obvious reasons. Truant Durant, Rattled Cubchoo, Simple Woobat, Motor Drive Emolga, that sort of thing. I've been rather successful, though it's taken a while.

2: Lack of motivation and/or inspiration. I'm not proud of it, but it happens sometimes.

3: There are times when my computer chooses to run like a pile of crap.

I know I said I'd have it out this week, but unfortunately, that's not looking so likely right now. Next week is a definite possibility. If I could guarantee anything better than that, I would.

Z-nogyroP
12th July 2012, 4:48 PM
1: Black 2 and White 2 came out, and I've been trying like crazy to get a bunch of the now-available Unova Pokémon with their Hidden Abilities over the GTS, preferably females, for obvious reasons. Truant Durant, Rattled Cubchoo, Simple Woobat, Motor Drive Emolga, that sort of thing. I've been rather successful, though it's taken a while.

Do you know if it's possible to get Shinies with their hidden abilities? And Simple Swoobat is a beast. Calm Mind+Simple+STAB Stored Power=absolute awesomeness.

Missingno. Master
13th July 2012, 12:49 AM
Do you know if it's possible to get Shinies with their hidden abilities? And Simple Swoobat is a beast. Calm Mind+Simple+STAB Stored Power=absolute awesomeness.

It is possible, though it's never happened to me. I know someone on these forums once hatched a Shiny Vulpix with Drought, and I once saw some video on Youtube when some guy successfully soft reset for a Shiny Zen Mode Darmanitan. It's just not possible to get them from Hidden Hollows or Entree Forest.

Simple Swoobat is pretty good, though. And believe it or not, so is Truant Durant, when you know how to use it. The trick is to bring it in after something else faints, and bring it in on something that won't be reasonably expected to switch out, and isn't a Flying-type and doesn't have Levitate. Durant uses Entrainment, foe KO's Durant. Then you bring in the Protect/Hone Claws Dugtrio with Arena Trap.

Jonah the Slaking
13th July 2012, 10:55 PM
It is possible, though it's never happened to me. I know someone on these forums once hatched a Shiny Vulpix with Drought, and I once saw some video on Youtube when some guy successfully soft reset for a Shiny Zen Mode Darmanitan. It's just not possible to get them from Hidden Hollows or Entree Forest.

Simple Swoobat is pretty good, though. And believe it or not, so is Truant Durant, when you know how to use it. The trick is to bring it in after something else faints, and bring it in on something that won't be reasonably expected to switch out, and isn't a Flying-type and doesn't have Levitate. Durant uses Entrainment, foe KO's Durant. Then you bring in the Protect/Hone Claws Dugtrio with Arena Trap.

Late reply, but this works better:

Entrainment with Durant, then send in a Shadow Tag Chandelure with Calm Mind and Protect. The foe can't switch out no matter what Pokemon it is, and it'll be able to OHKO everything with its STABs except Hydreigon and Heatran (both of which are Special Attackers).

On the subject of the fanfiction...love interests? I'm all excited about that!

Missingno. Master
17th July 2012, 2:15 PM
Just to keep you all updated, the next chapter is being worked on. I've finished up Red's Gym battle, but there's more to the chapter than that. I'm thinking it's now very reasonable to expect the chapter this week.

Z-nogyroP
17th July 2012, 3:18 PM
I personally find Truant Durant ironic, because ants work non-stop, and then this one decides to be lazy. LOL

I am also extremely excited for any love interests in the story. I just hope Red has better luck than Jack(at least, before he got Misty). Heeheehee.

Missingno. Master
19th July 2012, 11:36 PM
I apologize for the delay in getting this chapter up. There are times when I just get so lazy, and this was one of those times. Nevertheless, here it is!


Chapter 11: Paras's Gym Debut
~~~~~~~~
Walter placed his Poké Balls on the healing machine once more, then removed them seconds later, once the device had done its deed. He then returned to the edge of the pool to face Red, who already had a Poké Ball in hand.

"Let's get this going, dude!" exclaimed Walter as he threw one of the Poké Balls. "Tentacool, like, go!"

The ball split open, unleashing a blast of energy which formed in the water into Walter's Tentacool, once again looking ready for action. "Tentacool," it said in its nasally tone.

Red threw his own Poké Ball. "Rattata! Go!" he shouted.

In a flash of light, Red's Rattata materialized on a floating platform, and proceeded to stare down Tentacool.

"Tentacool, like, use your BubbleBeam!" ordered Walter.

"Rattata, Water Gun!" commanded Red.

As Tentacool launched a stream of bubbles from the tip of its left tentacle, Rattata unleashed a torrent of water from its mouth. The two attacks met in midair, each cancelling the other one out. Both combatants stopped their attacks very quickly.

"Quick Attack now!" called Red.

"Rrrrrraaattata!" screeched Rattata as it leapt into the water and began to swim towards Tentacool with incredible speed. Tentacool was unable to move out of the way in time, and thus was slammed backwards by the force of Rattata's Quick Attack, and crashed into the platform. Rattata then continued to swim towards Tentacool as the dazed Jellyfish Pokémon attempted to shake off the blow. Rattata leapt out of the water, prominent front teeth bared, and sank the aforementioned dental hardware into Tentacool, causing it to screech in pain.

"Tentacool!" Walter exclaimed. "Like, are you alright, dude?"

"Cool," Tentacool responded albeit feebly.

"Whoa!" Orange exclaimed. "Was that a Hyper Fang?!"

"I think it was!" Red replied, sounding just as surprised as Orange.

"Hyper Fang- Rattata's special attack," droned Red's Pokédex. "An exceptionally powerful biting technique which makes full use of Rattata's prominent teeth."

"Tentacool, use your, like, Skull Bash attack!" ordered Walter.

"Hyper Fang again, Rattata!" yelled Red.

As Tentacool rammed into Rattata at full speed, Rattata refused to give in, and sank its teeth into Tentacool yet again. Tentacool, however, was able to push Rattata away this time with its tentacles. Rattata swam back to its platform and looked on as Tentacool passed out in the water.

"Dude," murmured Walter as he withdrew Tentacool. "You, like, can't catch a break today. Bummer." He then put Tentacool's ball back in his bag and threw the other one. "OK, like, let's get him, LM4!"

In a flash of light, Walter's LM4 rematerialized, and promptly proceeded to swim laps around Rattata's platform.

"Rattata, return," said Red, holding out the Poké Ball as it sent forth its red beam, withdrawing the Rat Pokémon to its spherical innards.

"Smart move, little dude," smirked Walter. "Major, like, type disadvantage, there."

"My thoughts exactly," replied Red as he enlarged and threw another Poké Ball. "Paras, let's go!"

Red's Poké Ball split open, unleashing his most recent capture into the open. Paras landed on the platform, and eyed its swimming adversary warily.

"This'll be interesting," remarked Walter. "LM4, Aurora Beam!"

"Aw, crap, I forgot about that," groaned Red. "Uh, Paras, dodge it!"

Paras did not need telling twice. At the sight of the oncoming ray of rainbow light, Paras scuttled off to the side, narrowly evading the Ice-type move.

"Paras, Stun Spore!" Red ordered.

"Paaarraaaaas!" said Paras as the mushrooms on its back began to shake, unleashing a golden dust into the air. As LM4 readied another Aurora Beam, the dust settled on its body, and it seemed to freeze in the water.

"No, dude! Go underwater and, like, wash it off!" Walter ordered.

"F-f-four..." LM4 replied as it slowly sank into the pool's depths. Once it resurfaced, however, it wasn't looking particularly better.

"It must have breathed in the Stun Spore," remarked Violet.

"Paras, Scratch attack!" Red commanded.

"Paras par!" exclaimed Paras as it leapt off its platform, landed on LM4, and took a swipe at the Bubble Cube Pokémon.

"Foooour!" screeched LM4 as it tried to shake Paras off.

"Aurora Beam at, like, close range!" called Walter.

"L... M... FOOOUUUR!" bellowed LM4 with a great effort as it unleashed another Aurora Beam, this one hitting Paras dead-on, sending the Mushroom Pokémon flying right into its trainer's arms.

"Paras!" Red gasped; upon examining his Bug and Grass-type, it became clear that LM4's Aurora Beam had done its job; Paras was out cold.

"This is not good," murmured Violet as Red withdrew Paras. Red then took the other Poké Ball off his belt, enlarged it, and stared at it for a few seconds.

"You can do this," he sighed as he threw the ball. "I believe in you. Rattata, go!"

In a flash of light, Red's Rattata re-emerged from its Poké Ball, and landed on its platform.

"LM4, like, use BubbleBeam!" Walter ordered.

"Rattata, Water Gun!" called Red.

Rattata unleashed a stream of water at the same time LM4 let fly a blast of bubbles. Unlike with Tentacool, however, LM4's BubbleBeam cut right through Rattata's Water Gun. Noticing this, Rattata hastily jumped into the pool, narrowly evading the attack.

"Oh, we got him now, dude!" grinned Walter. "Rolling Kick!"

"Rattata! Hyper Fang!" Red called.

A foot sprouted from LM4's body as it sped through the water, headed right for Rattata. The Rat Pokémon treaded water in place, waiting... then, as LM4 got close, Rattata sprung out of the water, landing right on LM4, and sunk its fangs right into the Bubble Cube Pokémon.

"Fooour!" howled LM4 in pain.

"No, dude! Shake it off!" Walter was saying, somewhat stunned at the expertness of Rattata's jump.

"F... f... fooouuur..." whined LM4 as it merely shuddered in place, the paralysis obviously kicking in again.

"We got it now!" said Red triumphantly. "Rattata, finish it! Hyper Fang!"

"Rrraaaattaataaaaaa!" bellowed Rattata as it raised its head high, then brought it back down, biting into LM4 once more.

"Fooooooouuuuur," LM4 whined again as it ceased any sort of voluntary movement and merely began drifting on the water's surface. As Rattata swam back to its platform, Walter sighed, then withdrew LM4.

"We... we did it! We did it!!" Red exclaimed as it slowly dawned on him that he had in fact won against Walter.

"Nice going, dude," said Walter as he and Red withdrew their Pokémon. Walter then grabbed another badge and TM, then swam across the pool. Once he reached their end, Walter climbed out and presented Red with his Drench Badge and BubbleBeam TM.

"Thanks-" Red began.

"Yeah, yeah, let's get going," interrupted Orange, already halfway to the odd wall of water that served as a door. Rolling her eyes, Violet started after him, followed by Red. Once they were out of the Gym, Violet grabbed Orange by the shoulder and spun him around.

"What?" Orange asked defensively.

"Orange, what the hell is wrong with you?" demanded Violet. "You were so rude in there!"

"Oh, well, excuse me," Orange replied. "Mew forbid I should be rude in front of your boyfriend in there!"

"I- what- excuse me?!" Violet spluttered, her face starting to turn red.

"Oh, don't give me that crap!" snapped Orange. "You think I didn't notice? You were practically drooling all over him!"

"And why do you care?" Violet swiftly retorted, now taking the defensive.

"I don't!" Orange half-shouted. "Your little display was embarrassing! I was doing you a favor, getting you out of there when I did."

"Alright, stop it!" Red shouted suddenly, Startled by Red's sudden outburst, Orange and Violet stopped their bickering and turned to face him, both bearing expressions of mild surprise on their faces. Red's expression showed that he himself was surprised by his reaction. "...Look," he said at length, "...I'd just prefer it if the two of you... didn't argue like that, OK? I don't know, I just... I prefer it when we all get along, you know? I mean, I'm liking this, traveling with you two, and, well..." Red broke off, seemingly unable to finish what he was saying. Violet got the gist of it, however, and now looked somewhat ashamed of herself.

"Sorry, Orange," she muttered. "I mean, you were a little rude, but I guess I didn't have to explode at you like that."

"Yeah, I'm sorry too," Orange replied, also looking slightly ashamed. "I probably shouldn't get on your case like that when you're flirting with someone."

"I was not flirting with him!"

"Oh, come on! What kind of fool do you take me for?"

"I take you for the fool you are!" Violet retorted as they headed for the Pokémon Center, Red in the rear, facepalming as Violet and Orange continued to bicker.
~~~~~~~~
45 minutes later, the trio emerged from the Pokémon Center, all of their Pokémon having been restored to full health. Violet and Orange had also stopped arguing, a fact Red was pleased with.

"So where to next?" he asked.

"Well," Orange began, "The nurse said the nearest Gym was in Fansfor City. I think the leader there's supposed to use Psychic Pokémon."

"Psychic-types?" said Red, raising his eyebrows. "Those are supposed to be the strongest kinds of Pokémon. You sure we're ready?"

"I dunno," Orange admitted with a shrug. "I mean, Q's a Psychic-type itself, but still..."

"You're right," Violet added. "The closest thing I've got to a Psychic-type is Migraine, and it can only use Confusion when its headache is severe."

"Yeah, we should probably get in some extra training before that Gym," Red nodded. "We gotta find some more trainers and challenge them to battles."

"I heard one of the trainers in the Pokémon Center talking," said Orange. "The one with the Pidgey on his shoulder? He mentioned that a lot of trainers gather in the area north of Ruceelna for training."

"Well then," Red said, now grinning, "What are we waiting for? Let's get going!" As he said this, however, Orange rushed ahead, as if determined to be the one in front. Violet rolled her eyes at this, but said nothing as she followed the two boys.

They walked for around fifteen minutes, before finally locating the path which led to the northern exit of the city. As soon as they came to the top of a small hill, however, the trio stopped simultaneously.

"Whoa," Orange stated.

Sprawled before them, surrounded by lots of randomly-placed trees made up of wood, ceiling tiles, roof shingles, and threes, was... what appeared to be a large, smelly pond, filled with stagnant, greenish slime. A swamp.

"...Uh..." Red said, "...Are you sure we went the right way?"

"Positive," replied Violet, though she seemed rather disgusted at the marshy landscape before them. At that moment, however, a young boy came wading towards them. He was dressed in shorts and a white shirt, and wore a wide-brimmed hat. A net was slung over his shoulder.

"Hey, are you three trainers?" he called.

"Yeah," Red replied.

"Well then, welcome to Nugget Swamp!" the youth exclaimed. "Here's what happens around here; passing trainers get to challenge the five trainers, and if you beat us all, you win a great prize! Now, which one of you wants to take the challenge?"

"Well, we're kind of all trying to train here," said Violet. "Any way us three can take the challenge simultaneously?"

"Not really," the boy replied. "The Nugget Swamp challenge was really only made for one trainer at a time. But you know what? How about you go through and take turns? One of you battle me, then someone else battles the next guy, and so on? You'd only get one prize, though, you'll have to share it."

Red shrugged. "Sounds good to me," he said. Orange and Violet murmured their agreement.

"So who's first?" the boy asked.

"I'll go first!" Orange volunteered enthusiastically.

"You will not," replied Violet, stepping forward, near the edge of the swamp. "I'll go first."

"Hmph," grunted Orange in annoyance, though he raised no objection.

"Very well," said the boy, as he produced a Poké Ball. "Two Pokémon each, that sound good?"

"Fine by me," replied Violet.

"OK, then!" the boy exclaimed as he threw the Poké Ball in his hand. "I choose you, Kakuna!"

In a flash of light, a small, yellow Pokémon materialized in the thick slime, which didn't appear too deep; it was able to stay mostly unsubmerged. Red turned to Orange, who was steadily starting to back up, moving away from the Kakuna. Meanwhile, Violet held out her Pokédex.

"Kakuna, the Cocoon Pokémon, and the evolved form of Weedle," said the device. "Kakuna is almost incapable of movement. In most cases, it can only use Harden."

Violet snorted as she produced a Poké Ball from her belt and enlarged it. "This should be a breeze," she scoffed as she threw the ball. "Chompy, let's go!"

In a flash of light, the Bellsprout materialized. It stood in the swamp slime, swaying slightly as it faced Kakuna.

"Chompy, Vine Whip!" ordered Violet.

"Kakuna, Harden attack!" yelled the boy.

"Kaku!" replied Kakuna as a faint glow came over its shell for a moment. At the same time, Chompy unleashed a pair of vines and slammed them into Kakuna, sending it flying backwards, landing in deeper mud. Inexplicably, it seemed able to get back into an upright position and sort of hop its way back to the battle, though it took several minutes to do so.

"Now, Kakuna, Poison Sting!" the bug catcher said.

"Kakuna kuna!" Kakuna exclaimed as it extended a small pair of arm-like stingers from the front of its shell, and fired off volleys of glowing purple spikes from them. Chompy wailed as the attack made contact.

"Chompy!" exclaimed Violet, shocked that the Kakuna was capable of attacking.

"That's what you get for underestimating Bug Pokémon," sneered the boy, obviously very pleased with himself. "Poison Sting again, Kakuna!"

"Chompy, Vine Whip!" Violet commanded.

Kakuna unleashed another volley of poisonous needles, but Chompy was too quick for it this time. Using its vines, it grabbed a branch of a nearby tree and pulled itself up, evading the Poison Sting completely. Chompy then swung itself around the branch and launched itself at Kakuna, meeting the Bug/Poison-type with its vines, this time sending it flying into its trainer's stomach, knocking the wind out of him, and just knocking the Kakuna out.

"Oof..." gasped the trainer, holding the Poké Ball out. "Kakuna... Return..." Once Kakuna was back in its ball, the Bug Catcher wordlessly threw a second Poké Ball as he attempted to get his breath back. This Poké Ball yielded a small green wormlike creature- a Caterpie.

"Chompy, Wrap it!" commanded Violet.

"Tackle attack!" the Bug Catcher said, having recovered from the sudden Kakuna attack.

As Caterpie made its way through the swamp mud, Chompy leapt at Caterpie and wrapped its rootlike body around the Bug-type, rendering Caterpie incapable of executing its Tackle. After about a minute of continual squeezing, Caterpie fainted.

Sighing, the Bug Catcher withdrew Caterpie. "I did my best, I have no regrets," he said humbly as he stood aside and gestured further into the swamp, indicating that they should go on.

"You were great, Chompy," smiled Violet as she withdrew her Bellsprout. "Come on, guys, let's go," she added. Winning the battle, Red noticed, seemed to have put her in a somewhat better mood than before about having to wade through a swamp. Deciding not to question it, he and Orange followed Violet, slowly trudging their way through the mercifully shallow marsh.

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 11.

Jonah the Slaking
20th July 2012, 12:01 AM
I didn't expect Orange's reaction there. (to Orange, blatantly breaking the fourth wall) JEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAALOOOOOOOOOOOOUS?

I hope Chompy evolves soon. If the poor guy has trouble with a Kakuna, then he needs a LOT of work.

Good chapter! Didn't expect Nugget Swamp to take up its own chapter, anyway.

And I walk away without saying something about getting the first comment! I'm getting somewhere.

Moonlight Amaryllis
20th July 2012, 12:20 AM
Here we go, Chapter Eleven review...

The Gym Battle was a little too short for my taste, as was Paras's fight. The chapter name seemed to imply that Paras was going to have this huge role in the Gym Battle, but the chapter says otherwise.

Orange x Violet. Period. I just can't see a temporary character Gym Leader paired up with our Violet ^^. All the same, *sneers at Orange* looks like somebody's jealous~

Refresh my memory, was the Nugget Swamp that big bridge place?

Anyways, I shall await Chapter Twelve...

jeffdavid102
20th July 2012, 2:03 AM
yeah, it was Nugget Bridge in Kanto, though I guess missingno. master made it Nugget Swamp in Tanko. Anyway it was a good chapter. The above two comments said everything. A tip for the next chapters: try not to just make it that they have 4 continuous battles. Try to put some conversation or humor in it, maybe even during the fight

Missingno. Master
20th July 2012, 2:12 AM
I hope Chompy evolves soon. If the poor guy has trouble with a Kakuna, then he needs a LOT of work.
It's not so much Chompy had trouble with the Kakuna, it was more along the lines of neither Chompy nor Violet having expected anything but Harden out of it. But yes, Chompy needs work. Hence the training, actually.


Good chapter! Didn't expect Nugget Swamp to take up its own chapter, anyway.
Thanks! Glad you liked it.


And I walk away without saying something about getting the first comment! I'm getting somewhere.
That counts, you know. :)


Here we go, Chapter Eleven review...

The Gym Battle was a little too short for my taste, as was Paras's fight. The chapter name seemed to imply that Paras was going to have this huge role in the Gym Battle, but the chapter says otherwise.
Yeah, to be honest, the original title for the chapter was "The Trainers of Nugget Bridge", but once I had decided to only have the first trainer in this chapter, it made less sense. "Paras's Gym Debut" was more of a last minute chapter title.


Orange x Violet. Period. I just can't see a temporary character Gym Leader paired up with our Violet ^^. All the same, *sneers at Orange* looks like somebody's jealous~
I'm not going to comment on anything like this. Don't want to inadvertently spoil anything.


Refresh my memory, was the Nugget Swamp that big bridge place?

Anyways, I shall await Chapter Twelve...
Yep. Nugget Swamp = Nugget Bridge. I figured that a swamp with no way to avoid going in it was pretty much the perfect opposite of a clean river with a bridge spanning it, just like a canyon is more or less the opposite of a mountain. That said, haven't actually decided what will be in Rock Tunnel's place just yet.


yeah, it was Nugget Bridge in Kanto, though I guess missingno. master made it Nugget Swamp in Tanko.
Correct!


Anyway it was a good chapter. The above two comments said everything. A tip for the next chapters: try not to just make it that they have 4 continuous battles. Try to put some conversation or humor in it, maybe even during the fight
Don't worry, there'll be conversation and humor. You can count on that.

Z-nogyroP
20th July 2012, 1:50 PM
Chapter 11: Paras's Gym Debut
~~~~~~~~

Yay, Paras!


"Tentacool, like, go!"

For whatever reason, this line made me laugh.


"Hyper Fang- Rattata's special attack," droned Red's Pokédex. "An exceptionally powerful biting technique which makes full use of Rattata's prominent teeth."

WRONG! It's Raticate's special attack too!


"Dude," murmured Walter as he withdrew Tentacool. "You, like, can't catch a break today. Bummer."

Gym Pokemon don't seem to get those, do they?


"My thoughts exactly," replied Red as he enlarged and threw another Poké Ball. "Paras, let's go!"

Hooray!


"This'll be interesting," remarked Walter. "LM4, Aurora Beam!"

"Aw, crap, I forgot about that," groaned Red. "Uh, Paras, dodge it!"

Actually, I forgot about that too.


"No, dude! Go underwater and, like, wash it off!" Walter ordered.

There should be an ability like Water Veil that prevents Water Pokemon from getting paralyzed.


"It must have breathed in the Stun Spore," remarked Violet.

With what?


"Paras par!" exclaimed Paras as it leapt off its platform, landed on LM4, and took a swipe at the Bubble Cube Pokémon.

Do you come up with the species names yourself?


A foot sprouted from LM4's body as it sped through the water, headed right for Rattata. The Rat Pokémon treaded water in place, waiting... then, as LM4 got close, Rattata sprung out of the water, landing right on LM4, and sunk its fangs right into the Bubble Cube Pokémon.

"Fooour!" howled LM4 in pain.

"No, dude! Shake it off!" Walter was saying, somewhat stunned at the expertness of Rattata's jump.

Great. Now I can't get the image of a ninja Rattata crashing through a window with its teeth out of my head.


"Oh, well, excuse me," Orange replied. "Mew forbid I should be rude in front of your boyfriend in there!"

"I- what- excuse me?!" Violet spluttered, her face starting to turn red.

At first, I thought they were talking about Red. *facepalm*


"Well then, welcome to Nugget Swamp!" the youth exclaimed.

Ooh, Nugget Swamp. Probably less pleasant than Nugget Bridge.


"Now, Kakuna, Poison Sting!" the bug catcher said.

"Kakuna kuna!" Kakuna exclaimed as it extended a small pair of arm-like stingers from the front of its shell, and fired off volleys of glowing purple spikes from them. Chompy wailed as the attack made contact.

"Chompy!" exclaimed Violet, shocked that the Kakuna was capable of attacking.

"That's what you get for underestimating Bug Pokémon," sneered the boy, obviously very pleased with himself. "Poison Sting again, Kakuna!"

Kakuna: He will sting you with poison until you die.


Kakuna unleashed another volley of poisonous needles, but Chompy was too quick for it this time. Using its vines, it grabbed a branch of a nearby tree and pulled itself up, evading the Poison Sting completely. Chompy then swung itself around the branch and launched itself at Kakuna, meeting the Bug/Poison-type with its vines, this time sending it flying into its trainer's stomach, knocking the wind out of him, and just knocking the Kakuna out.

Or... maybe not.

I loved this chapter, although I can't picture VioletxWalter anytime soon. Now RedxViolet, that I can see happening.

Keep up the good work! Or else.

Missingno. Master
20th July 2012, 2:27 PM
Yay, Paras!
I'm guessing you like Paras?


WRONG! It's Raticate's special attack too!
The Pokédex kinda makes a point of not mentioning Pokémon the group hasn't yet encountered. Fun fact; in one of the Unova episodes of the anime, Ash's Pokédex identified Excadrill as the evolved form of Drilbur, but did not mention that Scolipede is the evolved form of Whirlipede, in the same episode. At which time, btw, they hadn't encountered either Whirlipede or Drilbur.


Gym Pokemon don't seem to get those, do they?
Not much, no.


Hooray!
You really like paras, don't you?


Actually, I forgot about that too.
Given the sizable gap between this chapter and the last one, not sure I blame you.


There should be an ability like Water Veil that prevents Water Pokemon from getting paralyzed.
Wouldn't that only make sense in the context of Stun Spore, though? Then again, this is Pokémon, it doesn't necessarily need to make sense.


With what?
...

...Uh...

...Um... Look, a distraction! *flees*


Do you come up with the species names yourself?
Yep, I do!


Great. Now I can't get the image of a ninja Rattata crashing through a window with its teeth out of my head.
You're welcome. :)


At first, I thought they were talking about Red. *facepalm*
Unless Violet was flirting with him (which she wasn't), I don't see why you'd think that.


Ooh, Nugget Swamp. Probably less pleasant than Nugget Bridge.
No, you think? :p


Kakuna: He will sting you with poison until you die.
Unless he doesn't. It was very tempting to give Kakuna a newer attack here, like Bug Bite, Iron Defense, or Electroweb, btw.


I loved this chapter, although I can't picture VioletxWalter anytime soon. Now RedxViolet, that I can see happening.

Keep up the good work! Or else.
Oh, I intend to keep up the good work. Threat or no threat. Glad you liked the chapter!

Jonah the Slaking
20th July 2012, 2:36 PM
That counts, you know. :)

https://encrypted-tbn3.google.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRd6O-1KYJOXwpFOjArEn5jumTYWx5jkfUC6hJ99-xSi53rEl20uA

Rattata seems to be MVP in most of the Gyms, to an extent. Why is that?

Z-nogyroP
20th July 2012, 2:53 PM
I'm guessing you like Paras?


*gasp* How did you know?



The Pokédex kinda makes a point of not mentioning Pokémon the group hasn't yet encountered. Fun fact; in one of the Unova episodes of the anime, Ash's Pokédex identified Excadrill as the evolved form of Drilbur, but did not mention that Scolipede is the evolved form of Whirlipede, in the same episode. At which time, btw, they hadn't encountered either Whirlipede or Drilbur.


Yeah, I saw that episode. I failed to understand why it did that. Sometimes, it doesn't even mention guys who were already seen, like in one episode(can't remember the name) it identified Metagross as the evolved form of Metang, but didn't say that Magnezone was the evolved form of Magneton.



Not much, no.


They deserve one.



You really like paras, don't you?


Yeah, I love that mushroom thing. I hate when people portray it as a zombie. Hopefully, if it evolves, you won't do that with Parasect.



Given the sizable gap between this chapter and the last one, not sure I blame you.


Aurora Beam isn't a very memorable move.



Wouldn't that only make sense in the context of Stun Spore, though? Then again, this is Pokémon, it doesn't necessarily need to make sense.


I agree.



...

...Uh...

...Um... Look, a distraction! *flees*


A distraction?! Where? You mean that shiny Weezing over there?



Yep, I do!


Very creative on your part.




You're welcome. :)


D:<



Unless Violet was flirting with him (which she wasn't), I don't see why you'd think that.


Actually, now I'm not sure why I'd think that either.



No, you think? :p


Maybe someone will catch a Grimer there!



Unless he doesn't. It was very tempting to give Kakuna a newer attack here, like Bug Bite, Iron Defense, or Electroweb, btw.


I can imagine. Yay for electric cocoons!



Oh, I intend to keep up the good work. Threat or no threat. Glad you liked the chapter!


Great! Now I don't even have to kidnap your mother! That's a big time-saver!


EDIT: Maybe Rock Tunnel could be like a subway!

EDIT 2: Ranked up, yay!

UltimatePokemonExpert
20th July 2012, 4:24 PM
OMG guys, VioletXOrange shipping! Haha, good chapter Missingo. Master, I really enjoyed it. I feel like Paras could be useful later on once it evolves. Missingo. Master, I came up with a shipping name for VioletXOrange.....Glitch shipping...haha I'm enjoying this too much.

Knightfall
20th July 2012, 4:31 PM
Did you really think you could get through a chapter without a reply from me?

Anyways, Red's gym battle aganist Walter was fun, I liked seeing Paras and Rattata battle. And I think that Orange might be the slightest bit jealous, I'm not completely sure, it was really subtle.

Nugget Swamp? Well, since when is anything normal in this fic? I wonder how they'll share the prize, since in the normal games they only give out one Nugget, but again, when is anything here normal?

Great chapter, and I eagerly await chapter 12 in the sludge pit that is Nugget Swamp.

Knightfall signing off... ;005;

Missingno. Master
20th July 2012, 6:46 PM
Rattata seems to be MVP in most of the Gyms, to an extent. Why is that?
IMO, there's not enough love for the Rattata line. I sometimes use a Raticate in FR/LG, and you'd be surprised how useful a move like Hyper Fang so early in the game can be.


*gasp* How did you know?
Oh, just a wild guess. :)


Yeah, I saw that episode. I failed to understand why it did that. Sometimes, it doesn't even mention guys who were already seen, like in one episode(can't remember the name) it identified Metagross as the evolved form of Metang, but didn't say that Magnezone was the evolved form of Magneton.
Still beats the outright errors, though, like Raticate's Jump Kick, Crobat's SonicBoom, and Dustox's Stun Spore. Plus, the first time James's Koffing used Poison Gas was before Koffing or Weezing actually had access to the move!


They deserve one.
You make a good point, yeah.


Yeah, I love that mushroom thing. I hate when people portray it as a zombie. Hopefully, if it evolves, you won't do that with Parasect.
Yeah, I never did portray Parasect as a zombie. Closest I came was in The Adventure of Adventureness, when

Hector's Parasect's mushroom was mentally wrestling with Parasect's mind for control of its body.


Aurora Beam isn't a very memorable move.
Hmm, good point, yeah.


A distraction?! Where? You mean that shiny Weezing over there?
What?! Where?!?!


Very creative on your part.
Thanks! I try.


D:<
:D


Actually, now I'm not sure why I'd think that either.
It happens. You read something wrong the first time, and when you come back to it you read it the right way and wonder how you ever made that mistake in the first place.


Maybe someone will catch a Grimer there!
I have something in mind.


I can imagine. Yay for electric cocoons!
Yeah, I had to smile when I saw Weedle got access to Electroweb. I might actually get this into a future Special Chapter of The Adventure of Adventureness.


EDIT: Maybe Rock Tunnel could be like a subway!
I'm considering the possibility.


EDIT 2: Ranked up, yay!
Congrats!


OMG guys, VioletXOrange shipping! Haha, good chapter Missingo. Master, I really enjoyed it. I feel like Paras could be useful later on once it evolves. Missingo. Master, I came up with a shipping name for VioletXOrange.....Glitch shipping...haha I'm enjoying this too much.
Glad you liked the chapter.


Did you really think you could get through a chapter without a reply from me?
No, not really. Then again, you imply that was my intent in the first place.


Anyways, Red's gym battle aganist Walter was fun, I liked seeing Paras and Rattata battle. And I think that Orange might be the slightest bit jealous, I'm not completely sure, it was really subtle.
Yeah. Subtle. There's a word for it. :)


Nugget Swamp? Well, since when is anything normal in this fic? I wonder how they'll share the prize, since in the normal games they only give out one Nugget, but again, when is anything here normal?
Off the top of my head, they could sell it and split the profit three ways.


Great chapter, and I eagerly await chapter 12 in the sludge pit that is Nugget Swamp.

Knightfall signing off... ;005;
Thanks!

Haven't started on Chapter 12 just yet, but it's on the to-do list for this weekend, make no mistake. I can't promise it'll be done in the span of a weekend, or even a week, but I'm definitely gonna try and get it done a hell of a lot quicker than I did the last chapter.

Jonah the Slaking
21st July 2012, 12:04 AM
IMO, there's not enough love for the Rattata line. I sometimes use a Raticate in FR/LG, and you'd be surprised how useful a move like Hyper Fang so early in the game can be.

Actually, I wouldn't be surprised. I used a Raticate myself in my Leaf Green Nuzlocke. When she first evolved, Hyper Fang made her the strongest mon on the team. I was actually able to keep her until I battled the Champion, where I had to sacrifice her in order to weaken Blastoise with Super Fang.

Zibdas
21st July 2012, 10:25 PM
Welp, I finished reading through this, and so far I'm liking what I'm seeing. May I be added to the PM list?

Missingno. Master
22nd July 2012, 12:05 AM
Actually, I wouldn't be surprised. I used a Raticate myself in my Leaf Green Nuzlocke. When she first evolved, Hyper Fang made her the strongest mon on the team. I was actually able to keep her until I battled the Champion, where I had to sacrifice her in order to weaken Blastoise with Super Fang.
Wow, a Raticate lasting that long in a Nuzlocke? Now that is cool. Reminds me of this Butterfree I used in LeafGreen. I took out half the Champion's team with Butterfree alone. Alakazam, Exeggutor, and Blastoise. He didn't faint, either, he stayed alive throughout the whole match. Wasn't even overleveled or anything, he was level 50 at the time of the battle. I still have that Butterfree- transferred it along with the rest of my LeafGreen team to Black, where I rotate them on and off my everyday in-game team. People tend to think of Butterfree as useless for anything other than the beginning of the game, but I know better. Even in Yellow, before the days of Compoundeyes Sleep Powder.


Welp, I finished reading through this, and so far I'm liking what I'm seeing. May I be added to the PM list?
You most certainly may.

Jonah the Slaking
22nd July 2012, 12:20 AM
Wow, a Raticate lasting that long in a Nuzlocke? Now that is cool. Reminds me of this Butterfree I used in LeafGreen. I took out half the Champion's team with Butterfree alone. Alakazam, Exeggutor, and Blastoise. He didn't faint, either, he stayed alive throughout the whole match. Wasn't even overleveled or anything, he was level 50 at the time of the battle. I still have that Butterfree- transferred it along with the rest of my LeafGreen team to Black, where I rotate them on and off my everyday in-game team. People tend to think of Butterfree as useless for anything other than the beginning of the game, but I know better. Even in Yellow, before the days of Compoundeyes Sleep Powder.

It was an amazing run--my first Nuzlocke, too. I like Butterfree--used her for a while on Heart Gold, but boxed her when I caught a Flaaffy, because Ampharos is awesome and I had way too many Flying types. As for Raticate, it was great, but without being able to grind in Victory Road...it was only a matter of time until she kicked the bucket, unless I didn't use her. I had considered giving her Blizzard to deal with Lance easier, but Raticate has bad Special Attack, and I've seen his Dragonites tanking Ice Beams from much more specially powerful Pokemon.

lucarioisawesome
22nd July 2012, 7:36 AM
pm list pls!
i really like this story!
keep up the good work!

Missingno. Master
22nd July 2012, 8:00 PM
pm list pls!
i really like this story!
keep up the good work!

No problem. And did you know, if your first line there had just one more syllable there, your post would constitute a haiku? :)

Missingno. Master
29th July 2012, 9:40 PM
Chapter 12: The Trainers of Nugget Swamp
~~~~~~~~
It was very slow work, moving through the swamp. Though it got progressively deeper, the trio were only up to their waists in smelly swamp water. The swamp water, however, was also thick, restricting their movement somewhat.

"Ugh," grunted Violet. "This is disgusting."

"Yes, we heard you," sighed Orange, rolling his eyes. "We heard you the first twenty times."

"Orange?"

"Yes?"

"Shut up."

At that moment, however, a young boy in a yellow t-shirt and blue shorts approached them, drifting on a small raft that appeared to be made of, curiously enough, concrete pillars bound together with vines.

"Hey, you!" he exclaimed to the trio, rowing himself towards them with what appeared to be a giant 7. "I'm the second trainer of Nugget Swamp, which of you is to be my opponent?"

"That'd be me," volunteered Red as he took a Poké Ball off his belt and enlarged it.

Grinning, the Youngster acted likewise, and threw his Poké Ball. ".4! Go!" he shouted.

The Poké Ball split open, and in a flash of light, a .4 materialized, gibbering excitedly. Red then threw his own Poké Ball. "Go, Rattata!"

In a flash of light, Red's Rattata appeared, expertly treading water in the swamp with ease.

".4! Agility!" the Younster ordered.

"Rattata, Quick Attack!" Red commanded.

.4 began to fly all over the place, zigzagging here and there, and picking up speed all the while. Rattata, meanwhile, leapt out of the water at high speed, slamming .4 into a nearby aluminum tree.

"Don't give in, .4!" the Youngster said. "Use Psywave!"

"Rattata, dodge it!" Red yelled, but his order was in vain; .4 launched a volley of glowing blue energy rings from its body, which Rattata was unable to evade. When the attack concluded, Rattata looked worn out already.

"That .4 must be pretty strong," Violet observed. "That Psywave looked like it did a lot."

"Use TM28 now!" the Youngster ordered. .4 complied, zooming forward and exploding in Rattata's face, sending the Rat Pokémon flying backwards. It landed in the swamp water before Red and slowly sank into it.

"Come on, Rattata," Red pleaded, plunging his hands into the muck in an attempt to locate Rattata, when suddenly a blinding flash of light forced his eyes shut. The glow brightened as its source breached the surface of the swamp, allowing the shocked onlookers to better observe Rattata evolving. Finally, the glow faded, revealing a larger creature with light brown fur to be swimming in front of Red. Orange took out his Pokédex and aimed it at Red's newly-evolved Pokémon.

"Raticate, the Rat Pokémon, and the evolved form of Rattata," droned the Pokédex. "Raticate's webbed hind feet make it an excellent swimmer. It hunts for prey by swimming in rivers."

"Yeah!" exclaimed Red. "We got it now, Raticate! Hyper Fang now!"

"Rrrrraticate!" shrieked Raticate as it zipped across the swamp with great speed and sank its prominent front teeth into .4, causing it to shriek in obvious discomfort. As Raticate let go, .4 fell into the swamp, where it bobbed on the surface, making no effort to move.

".4, get back!" exclaimed the Youngster, returning the Caffeine Pokémon to its Poké Ball. At the same time, he threw another Poké Ball. "Let's go, now, Ekans!"

In a flash of light, a long, purple creature was unleashed into the swamp, where it dove down and promptly resurfaced. It sported a pair of yellow eyes, and a single yellow band was visible around part of its body. It might have had more, Red supposed, but as it was half submerged in the swamp at the moment, there was really no way to tell. "Ekanssssss," it hissed menacingly. This time, it was Violet's turn to hold out her Pokédex.

"Ekans, the Snake Pokémon," it stated. "Ekans moves silently and stealthily. It eats the eggs of Pidgey and Spearow whole."

"Raticate, Hyper Fang!" Red ordered again.

"Ekans, Wrap it!" the Youngster commanded.

"Ekansssss!" Ekans hissed as Raticate swam towards it. As it came close, however, Ekans's long body emerged from beneath the swamp water and tightly bound the Rat Pokémon.

"Raticate, no!" Red exclaimed.

"Raticate can't move!" said Orange.

"R... Raa... Raaticaaaate..." Raticate grunted as it tried to break free of Ekans's grasp, but with no success. More than once, it tried to position its fangs so as to be able to bite Ekans, but it was unable to even do this. Once Raticate had fainted, Ekans relinquished its grip, allowing Red to withdraw it.

"OK," said Red as he took out another Poké Ball and threw it. "Charmeleon, let's go!"

The Poké Ball opened up, and Charmeleon was unleashed, landing on a low-hanging tree branch which, despite the fact that it appeared to have been made up entirely of tissue paper, held the Flame Pokémon's weight well. Though Charmeleon looked ready for action, it eyed the swamp water below warily.

"Ekans, Bite attack!" ordered the Youngster.

"Charmeleon, Flamethrower!" called Red.

"Char!" roared Charmeleon as it let loose with an impressive stream of flame, just as Ekans leapt out of the water. The Poison-type was caught in the Fire move, and upon its conclusion, Ekans's charred form fell back into the water, where it floated on the surface, making no attempt to move.

"Gah!" grunted the Youngster as he held out the Poké Ball. "Ekans, return!" Once Ekans was back in the ball, he rowed off to the side as Red withdrew Charmeleon. "I did my best, I have no regrets," he sighed, gesturing deeper into the swamp.

"I get the next one," Orange told Violet and Red.

"Sounds fair to me," Red agreed as they continued to wade.

Deeper and deeper into the swamp they wandered, wading sluggishly through the thick, smelly liquid. Then, Violet gave a violent cough.

"Ugh!" she exclaimed. "Something reeks around here!"

Orange responded by raising his left arm and sniffing the armpit. He then shrugged and said, "It's not me, I can tell you that much."

"No, this is worse than you," argued Violet, earning a glare from Orange. "This... ugh! It smells like an overflowing dumpster on a hot day!"

"Koff Koffing," came a deep voice from directly behind the trio. Simultaneously, they wheeled around, and could now see- and smell- the source of the particularly foul stench. A large purple sphere with small bumps all over it was floating in midair, giving off a strange, yellow gas from aforementioned bumps. It was drinking the swamp water, and it seemed to be enjoying itself, for it would occasionally give off a contented sigh, each one accompanied with another puff of smelly, yellow gas. It then turned around, having just noticed the trio; its face consisted of a pair of eyes above a wide, grinning mouth with only two small, yet sharp, teeth within. Below its face could be seen a skull-and-crossbones design, the same shade of yellow as the smoke it was emitting.

"It's a Koffing!" exclaimed Violet, holding out her Pokédex. "Oh, those are so cool!"

"Koffing, the Poison Gas Pokémon, droned the device. "Koffing stores several different types of toxic gases within its body, and mixes them to create potent Poison attacks. It feasts on raw garbage to add chemicals to these gases."

Orange turned and looked at Violet. "You're gonna catch this thing, aren't you?" he asked.

"Is it that obvious?" Violet replied, grinning happily, already holding a full-sized Poké Ball in her right hand. "Migraine, I choose you!" she added, throwing the ball.

In a flash of light, Violet's Psyduck materialized, landing in the swamp water and swimming around.

Koffing made the first move- it opened its mouth wide and unleashed a plume of black smoke from within, causing Migraine to give weird, quacking coughs.

"That's Koffing's Smog attack," Red warned Violet. "It could poison Migraine if you're not careful!"

"Migraine, Water Gun!" Violet ordered.

"Psy aye aye aye aye!" quacked Migraine as it unleashed a blast of water from its mouth, striking Koffing with expert precision as the Smog faded away.

"Koff!" groaned Koffing as the Water Gun made contact. Migraine unleashed another Water Gun, but this time, Koffing was ready, and responded by unleashing a thick stream of smelly, dark liquid from its mouth, meeting the Water Gun in midair, each attack blocking the other.

"What was that?" wondered Orange out loud.

"Koffing's Sludge attack, duh," replied Violet. "Migraine, use your Submission attack now!"

"Psy!" replied Migraine as it swam towards Koffing, then leapt out of the swamp water. Koffing, however, was ready for this one. The skull and crossbones briefly flashed with a white light, and then a pair of arms made entirely of yellow smoke burst forth from two of Koffing's pores. The gaseous arms grabbed Migraine, and Koffing began to wrestle it into a nearby tree.

"OK, since when can Koffing learn Submission?" asked Orange.

"It can't," Red replied, as he checked his Pokédex. "That Koffing knows Mimic, though, that must be what it's doing.

Meanwhile, Koffing had slammed Migraine headfirst into a tree, a fact Violet was quick to notice.

"Migraine, use your Confusion attack!" she ordered.

"Psy...." replied the Psyduck, its eyes glowing light blue. Then, a pair of blue beams of psychic energy exploded forth from the Water-type's eyes, striking Koffing directly, and sending it falling into the swamp water below. Groaning, it struggled to get back into the air, but Violet was wasting no time; she had already dug a red-and-white sphere out of her fanny pack.

"Poké Ball, go!" she exclaimed, throwing the orb at Koffing. Upon contact, the sphere split open, and Koffing, now turning into a shapeless mass of transparent red energy, was sucked inside. The ball then snapped shut and landed on the surface of the swamp water, where it wobbled back and forth, sending small ripples across the rancid surface of the marsh. After several moments, the ball fell still. Beaming, Violet waded over and picked up the Poké Ball.

"Nice," grinned Orange.

"What are you gonna name it, Violet?" asked Red.

"Skulls," replied Violet.

"'Skulls'?" repeated Orange. "Not 'Skull'? It only has the one skull, you know-"

"And when it evolves into a Weezing, it'll have two," Violet replied smoothly. "Now, let's keep moving, we have to find the next trainer- WAH!" For at that moment, some of the swamp muck in front of her started to rise up. As some of the water fell away, though, it became clear that what had risen wasn't really a part of the swamp. It did look to be roughly the same consistency, though, a pile of odd, purple gunk- with a pair of eyes.

"Eeeewwww," whined Violet as she backed up hastily, holding her Pokédex out like a shield. "Koffing are cool, at least, but Grimer are just creepy!"

"Grimer, the Sludge Pokémon," said Violet's Pokédex in its usual mechanical monotone. "Grimer appears in filthy areas. It thrives by sucking up polluted sludge that is pumped out of factories."

"Shoo! Get going!" Orange exclaimed to the Grimer. Grimer shook its head, however, defiantly standing its ground. At this, Orange waded his way in front of Violet and threw a Poké Ball into the air. "Q, let's teach this thing some manners!"

In a flash of light, Orange's Q materialized. "Kyuuuu," it hummed in its soft, melodic voice.

"Q, Confusion attack now!" Orange ordered. Q complied with the command, firing off a beam of blue energy. Grimer yelled out as the attack made contact, but immediately fought back by launching a stream of Sludge from its mouth. Q squealed in discomfort as the Poison move hit.

"That's one tough Grimer," remarked Red.

"Q! Headbutt!" exclaimed Orange.

"Kyuuuuu," replied Q as it dove down and slammed into Grimer, knocking its sludgy form backwards. Grimer got back up, however, and its eyes started to glow green. Immediately, several green orbs of energy floated out of Q's body and into Grimer's, seeming to revitalize the latter.

"Grimer can learn Mega Drain?!" exclaimed Orange. "That does it! Q, use TM50!"

"Wha?" Red replied, as his Pokédex spoke up.

"TM50, a move with no type. A frenzied technique in which the user slaps the opponent repeatedly."

A pair of glowing, rectangular appendages sprouted out of Q, one out of each side, and it dove down on Grimer, slapping it repeatedly with these appendages.

"Gri-i-i-i!" exclaimed Grimer, unable to react to the repeated slaps. As Q finished the attack, Grimer ceased movement, collapsing in a small, sludgy heap that bobbed about lazily on the water's surface. Orange then took out a Poké Ball.

"Orange, you wouldn't!" Violet exclaimed.

"Consider this payback for Flutters!" Orange cackled. "Poké Ball, g-" However, before Orange could throw the ball at Grimer, it turned into red energy and was sucked straight up. The trio's collective gaze followed this energy, until they saw where it ended up; inside a Poké Ball being held by a brown-haired girl around Red's age, who was standing on a tree limb.

"That Grimer was yours?!" exclaimed Violet, outraged.

"Yep!" the Lass replied. "I like to test trainers by not actually giving my Grimer commands, so they can't tell what they're up against. I was very impressed with that battle, though. I did my best, I have no regrets. Go on through."

Still glaring and grumbling audibly, Violet continued to wade through the swamp, Red and Orange following close behind.

~~~~~~~~
End of Chapter 12.

Z-nogyroP
30th July 2012, 1:36 AM
Here I am, to reply, obviously! When I should be working on my next oneshot, but this is much awesomer.


"Orange?"

"Yes?"

"Shut up."

Gotta love those moments.


"Come on, Rattata," Red pleaded, plunging his hands into the muck in an attempt to locate Rattata, when suddenly a blinding flash of light forced his eyes shut. The glow brightened as its source breached the surface of the swamp, allowing the shocked onlookers to better observe Rattata evolving. Finally, the glow faded, revealing a larger creature with light brown fur to be swimming in front of Red. Orange took out his Pokédex and aimed it at Red's newly-evolved Pokémon.

For some reason, I didn't like this evolution. I mean, I love Raticate, but it just seemed too sudden. And I doubt drowning a mouse in sludge would get it to evolve, but that's just me.


"Raticate's webbed hind feet make it an excellent swimmer.

I don't recall this being a dex entry, unless you make those up too.


"Raticate can't move!" said Orange.

Oh yeah, in RBY, if your opponent Wraps you, you're screwed.


"It's a Koffing!" exclaimed Violet, holding out her Pokédex. "Oh, those are so cool!"

O.O Didn't see that coming. I think we all figured Orange would be catching it, but nice twist anyhow.


"What are you gonna name it, Violet?" asked Red.

"Skulls," replied Violet.

"'Skulls'?" repeated Orange. "Not 'Skull'? It only has the one skull, you know-"

"And when it evolves into a Weezing, it'll have two," Violet replied smoothly.

Orange, have a Rawst berry. Because YOU JUST GOT BURNED!


"Gri-i-i-i!" exclaimed Grimer, unable to react to the repeated slaps. As Q finished the attack, Grimer ceased movement, collapsing in a small, sludgy heap that bobbed about lazily on the water's surface. Orange then took out a Poké Ball.

"Orange, you wouldn't!" Violet exclaimed.

"Consider this payback for Flutters!" Orange cackled.

I CALLED IT


"Poké Ball, g-" However, before Orange could throw the ball at Grimer, it turned into red energy and was sucked straight up. The trio's collective gaze followed this energy, until they saw where it ended up; inside a Poké Ball being held by a brown-haired girl around Red's age, who was standing on a tree limb.

"That Grimer was yours?!" exclaimed Violet, outraged.

Or... not.

This one felt shorter than your others, but still just as good. But still, an evolution, capture, and new move in one chapter? Not complaining about any, though.

Also, I found one thing this fic is lacking. Spongebob references. We all want them. You want them. Do it! Do it! Moo it! Moo it! Fairies! Fairies!

Moonlight Amaryllis
30th July 2012, 2:00 AM
Aaaaaaand here's my review for Chapter Twelve!

This chapter seemed a little bit too short, but it could be just me. The lack of creativity in the chapter title...was there any? Also, Rattata's evolution did seem a little sudden, but Rattata evolved into Raticate quickly, so...but Charmeleon is back :D yay~. Orange needs to improve on his timing on his evil laugh, seeing Grimer belonged to someone else. Violet's capturing of Koffing seemed unexpected, but one, her name is technically purple and she kind of needs a purple Pokemon and two, how else is the ever expected Weezing supposed to debut?

I await Chapter 13 (bwahaha, unlucky number :P)!

Knightfall
30th July 2012, 3:47 AM
Time, Missingno. Master? Is it really that time again?

Well this was an enjoyable chapter amid the putrid waters of Nugget Swamp.

Raticate's evolution was unexpected, but welcome none the less. And Z-nogyroP, Raticate's Yellow dex entry says it uses its webbed feet to swim across rivers. So I assume that makes it a good swimmer.

I have to say that any chapter with Charmleon in it is good in my book, even if it is for a short time.

I knew it, I just knew that you couldn't write a fic with out someone catching a Koffing. And Violet's naming it Skulls is good planning for when it evolves.

Now that Grimer psydo-battle was pretty creative. Making them think it was a wild Pokemon when it was actually a trainer battle in disguise. How clever of you. Though I really wanted Orange to catch it, it would have been humorous to read.

Well that about concludes my review, good luck with the next chapter.

Knightfall signing off ...;005;

Zibdas
30th July 2012, 3:49 AM
Another good chapter, Mr. Missingno. Master. Seemed a bit short or rushed or something, but I digress. It was still very enjoyable regardless. Also Orange = meanie

SneaselFTW
30th July 2012, 11:01 AM
"It's a Koffing!" exclaimed Violet, holding out her Pokédex. "Oh, those are so cool!"

Why am I not suprised... :p

Anyway, good chapter. I don't realyy like Raticate... Meh, it's better than Magikarp/Feebas. AND ZUBAT.

P.S Is that Raticate in the top percentage of Raticate? :D

Missingno. Master
30th July 2012, 4:35 PM
Here I am, to reply, obviously! When I should be working on my next oneshot, but this is much awesomer.
Is awesomer even a word? Oh, well, who cares? Glad you like it!


I don't recall this being a dex entry, unless you make those up too.
I only make up the dex entries for the Glitch Pokémon. For the official Pokémon, I always use the Generation I dex entries (R/B, Y, Stadium, and FireRed). Some of Raticate's dex entries mention its hind feet being webbed and it swimming in rivers to catch prey, too.


Oh yeah, in RBY, if your opponent Wraps you, you're screwed.
That's one of the things I miss about RBY, right up there with Glitch Pokémon and Hyper Beam not requiring a recharge turn if it KOs the foe. It's also why I use a Tentacool in Yellow.


O.O Didn't see that coming. I think we all figured Orange would be catching it, but nice twist anyhow.
I never really pictured giving Koffing to Orange.


Orange, have a Rawst berry. Because YOU JUST GOT BURNED!
I have no actual response to this, I just had to quote it because it's that good.


I CALLED IT



Or... not.
Has The Adventure of Adventureness taught you nothing about my writing? Even if you expect the unexpected, you'll still get surprised.


This one felt shorter than your others, but still just as good. But still, an evolution, capture, and new move in one chapter? Not complaining about any, though.
Yeah, it was a little bit on the shorter side, I'll admit. Glad you like it, though.


Also, I found one thing this fic is lacking. Spongebob references. We all want them. You want them. Do it! Do it! Moo it! Moo it! Fairies! Fairies!
I take it you wouldn't mind a few Fairly OddParent references, either? :p I'll consider it, but as this fic is less humor-centric than The Adventure of Adventureness, don't get your hopes too high.


Aaaaaaand here's my review for Chapter Twelve!

This chapter seemed a little bit too short, but it could be just me. The lack of creativity in the chapter title...was there any? Also, Rattata's evolution did seem a little sudden, but Rattata evolved into Raticate quickly, so...but Charmeleon is back :D yay~.
It wasn't just you, the chapter was a tad... length-challenged.


Orange needs to improve on his timing on his evil laugh, seeing Grimer belonged to someone else.
In his defense, nobody could've seen that coming.


Violet's capturing of Koffing seemed unexpected, but one, her name is technically purple and she kind of needs a purple Pokemon and two, how else is the ever expected Weezing supposed to debut?
You had to have been expecting someone to catch a Koffing, though. Especially given how you describe Weezing as "ever expected". It shows you know me too well. :)


Time, Missingno. Master? Is it really that time again?
I'd say so.


Well this was an enjoyable chapter amid the putrid waters of Nugget Swamp.
Thanks!


I have to say that any chapter with Charmleon in it is good in my book, even if it is for a short time.
I hear that, I feel the same way about Weezing.


I knew it, I just knew that you couldn't write a fic with out someone catching a Koffing.
Couldn't resist, yeah.


Now that Grimer psydo-battle was pretty creative. Making them think it was a wild Pokemon when it was actually a trainer battle in disguise. How clever of you. Though I really wanted Orange to catch it, it would have been humorous to read.
Glad you liked it. And Orange still wants to look for a Grimer, though, this was but a minor setback to him. Whether or not he succeeds, however, that's another story.


Well that about concludes my review, good luck with the next chapter.

Knightfall signing off ...;005;
Thanks!


Another good chapter, Mr. Missingno. Master. Seemed a bit short or rushed or something, but I digress. It was still very enjoyable regardless. Also Orange = meanie
In Orange's defense, Violet started it. She caught Flutters in the first place just because it bothered Orange, so he wants payback.


Why am I not suprised... :p
Because you know me too well?


Anyway, good chapter. I don't realyy like Raticate... Meh, it's better than Magikarp/Feebas. AND ZUBAT.
Aww, what do you got against Zubat?


P.S Is that Raticate in the top percentage of Raticate? :D
We'll see. :D

Z-nogyroP
30th July 2012, 5:16 PM
Is awesomer even a word? Oh, well, who cares? Glad you like it!


I highly doubt it, but I don't care!



I only make up the dex entries for the Glitch Pokémon. For the official Pokémon, I always use the Generation I dex entries (R/B, Y, Stadium, and FireRed). Some of Raticate's dex entries mention its hind feet being webbed and it swimming in rivers to catch prey, too.


Okay. I suppose I need to do some homework on RBY entries. I get most of my knowledge of them from Pokedex One-Shots.



That's one of the things I miss about RBY, right up there with Glitch Pokémon and Hyper Beam not requiring a recharge turn if it KOs the foe. It's also why I use a Tentacool in Yellow.


Yeah, RBY was sorta messed up in that way. But I miss how much of a threat Toxic+Leech Seed was.



I never really pictured giving Koffing to Orange.


I dunno. I suppose it just seemed... fitting, to me.



I have no actual response to this, I just had to quote it because it's that good.


Here's hoping someone will sig it! EDIT: Ignore that, I did!



Has The Adventure of Adventureness taught you nothing about my writing? Even if you expect the unexpected, you'll still get surprised.


Yeah, like in the Awesome of Awesomeness, whenyou made Dean seem like such a good guy, and then he betrayed them. You had most of us(except Roy) fooled.



I take it you wouldn't mind a few Fairly OddParent references, either? :p I'll consider it, but as this fic is less humor-centric than The Adventure of Adventureness, don't get your hopes too high.


Well, in that case, I'll cancel the order for the two thousand fireworks I was gonna blow up when you made your first one...

Jonah the Slaking
30th July 2012, 5:47 PM
NEWCHAPTERASDFASDFASDF

RATICATE

CHARMELEON

KOFFING

TRAINER GRIMER

ITS ALL AMAZING

Ahem...ugh. Ok, back to my senses now. Nice chapter, but Flutters REALLY should've become a Butterfree before Rattata did any evolving. That would mean that, unless RBY has altered evolution chains, Red is doing more than twice as good as Violet. He's gotten a level 20 and a level 16, and she can't even get a level 10.

Missingno. Master
30th July 2012, 5:55 PM
NEWCHAPTERASDFASDFASDF

RATICATE

CHARMELEON

KOFFING

TRAINER GRIMER

ITS ALL AMAZING

Ahem...ugh. Ok, back to my senses now. Nice chapter, but Flutters REALLY should've become a Butterfree before Rattata did any evolving. That would mean that, unless RBY has altered evolution chains, Red is doing more than twice as good as Violet. He's gotten a level 20 and a level 16, and she can't even get a level 10.

...You should probably re-read a few of the previous chapters. Flutters has been a Butterfree for quite some time now.

Moonlight Amaryllis
30th July 2012, 6:47 PM
It wasn't just you, the chapter was a tad... length-challenged.

Eh, happened to me on my first few chapter of my fic :P. Just edit it and add more.



In his defense, nobody could've seen that coming.

What if it was wild and it wiped the floor with his team all of a sudden or got away?



You had to have been expecting someone to catch a Koffing, though. Especially given how you describe Weezing as "ever expected". It shows you know me too well. :)

It's a well known fact you like Weezing, as it's my reputation to love Dark-Types, particularly Absol :D

Oh, and awesome isn't a word. It's strictly said "more awesome".

Jonah the Slaking
30th July 2012, 8:08 PM
...You should probably re-read a few of the previous chapters. Flutters has been a Butterfree for quite some time now.

...And now I'm a moron.

*sits in a corner*

Zibdas
31st July 2012, 4:44 AM
Oh, and just throwing this out there, I was hoping 404 would play into the AoA continuity. It would be fun to have a counterpart of Cheeseball (Cocoa Puff?) as the second gyum leader, sespecially since canonically Red's best friend all his life was Gary

Missingno. Master
1st August 2012, 2:32 AM
It's a well known fact you like Weezing, as it's my reputation to love Dark-Types, particularly Absol :D
You like Dark-types? Cool. It may interest you to know, then, that though I love all Poison-types, high on my list of favorites happens to be Drapion and Skuntank.


Oh, and awesome isn't a word. It's strictly said "more awesome".
I'm pretty sure "awesome" is a word. :p Awesomer, on the other hand, you are right, it isn't a word. But then, I ain't no grammar nazi.


...And now I'm a moron.

*sits in a corner*
Oh, you're not a moron. This kind of thing can happen.


Oh, and just throwing this out there, I was hoping 404 would play into the AoA continuity. It would be fun to have a counterpart of Cheeseball (Cocoa Puff?) as the second gyum leader, sespecially since canonically Red's best friend all his life was Gary
I haven't ruled such a thing out just yet. Whether or not we get a Cheeseball counterpart, I can't really say at the moment. Mainly because I don't know.

The next chapter... Not gonna lie, it's going kinda slow. That said, I will be working on it this week, make no mistake, so to expect it by this weekend wouldn't be unreasonable. By no means would it be a sure thing, but it wouldn't be unreasonable.

jeffdavid102
1st August 2012, 3:48 AM
Sorry that I haven't commented, but it was a good chapter. All of my complaints have already been noticed, but there were not any. Keep up the good work

ESPNfanatic35
3rd August 2012, 3:01 AM
Hooray for Raticate! Gotta love Hyper Fang! Another fabulous chapter of entertainment and humor as usual. Somehow, Violet telling Orange to shut up never gets old.

ChloboShoka
4th August 2012, 9:48 PM
Started reading the fic today and I found it interesting and amusing at the same time. Love how you put glitch pokemon in thism cause it's nice they're getting some love. The story reminded me of the time when I played in Blue and caught a level 128 starmie and battled Professor Oak and his army of missingnos. Very entertaining characters and creative stuff.

Missingno. Master
16th August 2012, 4:07 PM
Started reading the fic today and I found it interesting and amusing at the same time. Love how you put glitch pokemon in thism cause it's nice they're getting some love. The story reminded me of the time when I played in Blue and caught a level 128 starmie and battled Professor Oak and his army of missingnos. Very entertaining characters and creative stuff.

Yeah, I'd always be finding high level Golbat and Snorlax myself, in addition to Missingno., obviously.

I am well aware that the next chapter is taking a while, BTW, but don't worry, it is getting worked on. I intend to have it out by the end of the week, but I'm not entirely sure how feasible this is. It'll definitely be out by the end of the month, though, for sure.

Missingno. Master
26th August 2012, 2:49 AM
I'd just like to apologize for the extreme delay in getting this chapter out. Summer's coming to an end, and that's somehow making me even lazier than usual. But enough of my excuses, here it is, chapter 13!


Chapter 13: Attack of the 6-Foot Weepinbell
~~~~~~~~
"Finish it, Skulls! Sludge attack now!" shouted Violet.

"Koff!" Skulls exclaimed as it blasted its opponent, a white-and-orange frilly fish-like Pokemon with a single, sharp horn on its head, with a stream of thick, smelly, dark goop. The Goldeen was blasted backwards by the Poison move, and it came to rest right in front of its trainer, who was clad only in swim trunks, and was, for reasons nobody in the group really wanted to know, swimming in the deeper portion of Nugget Swamp. Sighing, the Swimmer withdrew Goldeen.

"I did my best, I have no regrets," he stated simply as he swam off to the side. "Proceed."

"You do know you can just stand up in this, right?" asked Orange. "It's not that deep."

"I know that," scoffed the Swimmer. "I just don't like to take the easy way out. Most trainers will ride an aquatic Pokémon across the waves, but not me. Besides, if I ever pass up an opportunity to swim, how will I keep up this buff physique?" he added, flexing his left arm in order to show off his muscles.

"Sounds reasonable to me," Violet said, eyeing aforementioned muscles.

"Let's go," said Orange pointedly, leading the way. Violet shot him a particularly nasty glare, but followed him, albeit somewhat reluctantly. Red said nothing, and merely waited for the fight to break out once they were out of earshot of the Swimmer. To his mild surprise, however, this never happened. Violet and Orange remained silent as the trio made their way through the waist-deep swamp water, though they would occasionally shoot dirty looks at each other.

Before long, a boy around Red's age approached the group, dressed in a green jacket with matching pants and a cap.

"Let me guess, you're number five?" asked Red.

"You got that right," nodded the Jr. Trainer. "Which one of you am I battling?"

"I'll go," volunteered Red. "Violet, you got the last one, and Orange, you took the one before that."

"That one shouldn't count, I didn't know that Grimer had an owner," Orange replied stubbornly.

"It still counts, though," Violet added.

"Violet?" said Orange.

"What?"

"Shut up."

Violet looked to be at a loss for words, obviously not having expected this. Orange smirked at the dumbfounded expression on her face.

"Yeah, how do you like it?" he asked. "Not so funny when it's turned around on you, is it? How was that, Red? Er... Red?"

For Red had already started to battle the Jr. Trainer. His Paras was floating on the surface of the swamp water, glancing warily at its opponent- a Mankey.

"Mankey, go! Scratch attack!" ordered the Jr. Trainer.

"Paras, Stun Spore!" Red commanded.

"Paraaas!" exclaimed Paras as it unleashed a cloud of yellow dust from its mushrooms. Mankey, who had been swimming expertly through the pond water, approaching Paras at a fast pace, was forced to stop as the spores stunned it.

"Now Scratch it!" called Red.

Paras clumsily swam through the swamp water, and took a vicious swipe at Mankey with its right claw. Screeching in pain, Mankey swam, with great difficulty, over to the nearest tree, which appeared to be made entirely out of popsicle sticks, duct tape, and toilet seats. Slowly, the Pig Monkey Pokémon climbed its way up the arboreal anomaly, and stood on a branch hanging over the swamp, glaring down at Paras.

"Good, Mankey!" the Jr. Trainer exclaimed. "Use your Body Slam!"

"Paras, Leech Life now!" Red commanded.

Mankey screeched as it leapt out of the tree, attempting to land on Paras, who simply bared its teeth, and chomped down on Mankey as it landed, sucking away some of its energy.

"That does it, Mankey, let's get ready to finish it!" the Jr. Trainer shouted. "Use Rock Slide!"

"Paras, Bide!" Red exclaimed, causing Violet and Orange to exchange surprised looks.

"Bide?" repeated Orange. "Since when-"

"I used the TM I won in Rewept Gym while Violet was battling that Swimmer," Red explained. "I figured Paras could use another move."

Paras's entire body took on a bright yellow glow as Mankey fired a pair of red beams from its eyes. The beams flew over Paras, leaving a number of strange, glowing red circles in their wake. Then, from each circle fell a number of brown boulders, each one landing on Paras. Most of them fell into the swamp water after striking the Mushroom Pokémon, but some remained on top. Then, once the attack was done, the glow intensified, and Paras launched an intense beam of yellow energy at the surprised Mankey, knocking it off the tree limb and into its trainer's arms. Mankey made no further effort to move.

"I did my best, I have no regrets," sighed the Jr. Trainer as he withdrew Mankey and stepped aside.

"Is that all you guys can say when you lose?" asked Orange. "More importantly, that's five of you guys we've crushed now, so where's our reward?"

"You're almost out of the swamp," replied the Jr. Trainer. "The guy in charge of the challenge should be standing at the edge of the swamp, he's the guy you talk to about a reward."

"Thanks," said Red as he withdrew Paras. Red now led the way, and sure enough, not two minutes later, the group found themselves back on dry ground/aluminum siding/floor tiles. They had left Nugget Swamp. Standing nearby was a man wearing a nondescript gray hoodie sweatshirt and white pants. He approached the trio immediately.

"I must congratulate the three of you," he said. "You have defeated our five contest trainers, and have earned this great reward- a genuine gold Nugget!" At this, he reached into a bag slung over his shoulder and pulled out what appeared to be a solid gold sphere, about the size of a Poké Ball.

"OK, I'm just gonna come right out and say it," said Orange. "Which one of us holds onto it?"

"I volunteer Red," Violet replied. "I think we can both trust him."

"Thanks, Violet," grinned Red as he accepted the Nugget from the man and placed it into his backpack.

"When we go back to Ruceelna tonight, we'll stop at the Pokémart," suggested Orange. "Those places will buy literally anything off of a trainer. We sell it there and split the profits three ways, that sound good?"

"Fine by me," said Red and Violet simultaneously.

"One more thing," the man added. "Would any of you be interested in joining Team Debug? We're a-"

"An extremist criminal organization who tries to wipe out entire races of Pokémon," Violet interrupted. "Thanks, but no thanks."

"Over my dead body," added Orange.

"Same here," put in Red.

The man scowled at the trio. "You can't be serious," he stated. "Sure, Team Debug gets some bad press, but we're going to save the world! Now, it looks like you three need convincing! I'm gonna make you an offer you can't refuse!" As he said this, he unzipped his hoodie, revealing his shirt which displayed the Team Debug insignia, and then took three Poké Balls off his belt and threw them all at once. "Diglett! Venonat! Weepinbell! Go!"

In three flashes of light, a trio of Pokémon materialized; a small, brown creature with a simple face consisting of two small, beady, black eyes, a large red nose, and no visible mouth, which appeared to be at least partly underground; a spherical insect covered in purple fur, with a pair of large, round, red eyes, a mouth with two small fangs, a pair of antennae, and two small hands; a yellow, bell-shaped creature that looked something like a larger-than-life replica of a Bellsprout's head, with a pair of leaves on its sides, not unlike what a Bellsprout had on its twig-like torso. Simultaneously, Red, Orange, and Violet held out their Pokédexes at these creatures.

"Diglett, the Mole Pokémon," said Red's Pokédex. "Diglett lives about one yard underground, where it feasts on plant roots. It sometimes appears aboveground."

"Venonat, the Insect Pokémon," droned Orange's Pokédex. "Venonat lives in the shadows of tall trees. It uses its large, radar-like eyes to move about in darkness."

"Weepinbell, the Flycatcher Pokémon, and the evolved form of Bellsprout," stated Violet's Pokédex. "Weepinbell's Acid can dissolve anything. This Acid in addition to its PoisonPowder are its main means of subduing its prey."

Once the Pokédexes had finished speaking, Red took out a Poké Ball and enlarged it, Orange and Violet following suit. They then threw the balls simultaneously.

"Charmeleon, I choose you!" Red shouted.

"Chompy, let's do it!" exclaimed Violet.

"Go! .4!" exclaimed Orange.

In another three flashes of light, Red's Charmeleon, Orange's .4, and Chompy, Violet's Bellsprout, materialized at the same time. The Debug Grunt scowled at the sight of .4.

"Attack that abomination first!" he ordered. "Diglett! Scratch!"

"Wait a second, Scratch?" asked Orange, as he cast a dubious glance at the Mole Pokémon, who seemed to sport no obvious appendages, let alone anything sharp. "With what?" he asked.

As if in response, Diglett moved forward, plowing its way through the rock, the ceramic tiles, and the aluminum siding, and its nose began to glow. As the nose glowed, it lengthened, coming to a point. Diglett then twisted around in the ground as it approached .4, the point of its nose raking the Caffeine Pokémon's side.

"Well, that was weird," Orange remarked. ".4, use TM28!"

.4 gibbered excitedly as it dove down at Diglett and promptly exploded. As the dust cleared, however, it became clear that Diglett had evaded the attack by going underground, as evidenced by the small hole in the ground, and the fact that Diglett was resurfacing some five feet away from .4, looking totally unscathed.

"Chompy, Growth!" Violet ordered.

"Charmeleon, hit Venonat with Flamethrower!" commanded Red.

".4, Agility!" called Orange.

The Grunt then proceeded to bark out orders to his Pokémon. "Diglett, Sand-Attack! Weepinbell, you use your own Growth! Venonat, Sleep Powder!"

Chompy and Weepinbell simultaneously took on light green auras and proceeded to grow until they were double their usual sizes. Weepinbell was now just as tall as its trainer, while Chompy was still shorter than its evolved form. As they glared at each other, Diglett spun in place, sending a spray of sand in Charmeleon's direction, though .4 began to fly in circles around the Ground-type with increasing rapidity. Then, on Orange's order, .4 used TM28 once more, and this time, the blast knocked Diglett out. Charmeleon, meanwhile, easily overpowered the cloud of blue dust Venonat had emitted with a powerful stream of fire, rendering the Venonat unconscious in the process.

The grunt withdrew Diglett and Venonat, but didn't look particularly concerned. "Wrap the Charmeleon!" he ordered.

"Bell," grunted the Weepinbell in a deep voice as the brown stem-like protrusion on top of its head lengthened, growing into a lengthy vine, and, before anyone could do anything about it, binding Charmeleon completely, except for its tail. Charmeleon flailed its tail about, attempting to use Ember on Weepinbell, but the attack missed miserably. Weepinbell squeezed tighter as Chompy and .4 moved in to attack. .4, in its excitement, however, used TM28 a few seconds too early. While Weepinbell was hit by the attack, it didn't seem to have taken nearly as much damage from the blast as it ought to have. It did, however, have the effect of forcing Weepinbell to release Charmeleon, though this turned out to not be such an issue; Charmeleon had already fainted.

"Now use Razor Leaf!" the grunt ordered as Red withdrew Charmeleon.

"Chompy, Vine Whip!" Violet commanded.

".4, TM09!" shouted Orange.

Weepinbell swung its leaves around wildly, and a flurry of razor-sharp leaves flew forth from them. Chompy sprouted a pair of vines from behind its leaves, managing to swat down most of them, but some struck .4, who screeched with discomfort as its body caught fire. .4 rose up high into the air, ready to dive-bomb Weepinbell.

"Jump with Vine Whip!" roared the grunt.

"Bell bell Weepinbell," replied Weepinbell as its brown stem extended once again, and this time, it slapped the ground hard, propelling itself into the air just as .4 dove. The Pokémaniac-type slammed into the ground, creating a fiery explosion, which Weepinbell had managed to evade completely. Knowing already that .4 was down, Orange withdrew it, leaving only Chompy to deal with the Weepinbell.

"We are so screwed," muttered Orange to Red.

"I heard that," snapped Violet as Weepinbell landed right where it had started from. "Chompy, Sleep Powder!"

"Weepinbell, Slam!" commanded the grunt.

The Bellsprout exhaled a cloud of glittery blue dust from its large mouth, which Weepinbell hopped out of the way of before slapping Chompy with its vine, sending it flying into a large rock. Shakily, Chompy got back onto its roots and walked back over to Weepinbell, a determined look in its eyes. Without even waiting for orders, Chompy lunged at its evolved counterpart, its body getting longer, and constricted the Weepinbell with its continually lengthening torso. Weepinbell groaned under the pressure of the Wrap attack, and attempted to pry the Bellsprout off with its leaves. This proved futile, however, and only spurred Chompy to squeeze harder. At last, the Bellsprout relinquished its grip; the Weepinbell hadn't fainted yet, but was panting heavily. Clearly the attack had taken a lot out of it, but it still looked willing to battle.

And then Chompy began to glow.

"All right!" Violet exclaimed as her starter Pokémon proceeded to evolve, its slender body shrinking away into the top of its head, the head itself getting larger, the leaves shifting their position. When the white light faded, there were now two six-foot Weepinbell present, each one glaring at the other, though the Debug Grunt's Weepinbell looked noticeably less confident now.

"Chompy, let's end this," said Violet, a confident smirk on her face. "Acid."

"Bell!" exclaimed Chompy as it blasted a stream of corrosive purple fluid from its gaping mouth. The grunt's Weepinbell groaned in agony as the attack landed, and quickly flopped over onto its back, shrinking back down to its regular size.

"All right, Chompy!" Violet cheered as her own Weepinbell shrunk back down to its original size.

"It's a shame," sighed the grunt as both Weepinbell were withdrawn to their Poké Balls by their respective trainers. "Talent like yours, you could have made it big in Team Debug. You, though, redhead, you got a lot to learn about Pokémon. Specifically, what is and isn't a Pokémon-"

"Yeah, yeah, yeah, we've heard that garbage before," interrupted Orange as he walked away.

"Hey, Orange, where are you going?" asked Red as he ran over to him. "We gotta go back through the swamp to get back to Ruceelna."

"Yeah, but we don't have to get back just yet," replied Orange as Violet caught up. "The day's only half done, and I can see some trainers over there. Didn't we come out this way for training in the first place?" When neither Red nor Violet raised any objections, Orange grinned at them and ran off towards the nearest trainer, challenging him to a battle at the top of his lungs.

"I don't know why, but I hate it when he's right," sighed Violet as she and Red walked off after Orange.

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End of Chapter 13.

Zibdas
26th August 2012, 5:10 AM
Good chapter, though I had to take a moment to remember everything after so long/ Vines of toilet seats.... unpleasant sounding, non?


we'll stop at the Pokémart" suggested Orange.
Missing a comma here.

Rotomknight
26th August 2012, 1:57 PM
I saw some grammatical mistake around the pokemart, like missing a "
Increase chapter length.

UltimatePokemonExpert
26th August 2012, 7:02 PM
Awesome! I'm looking foward to them meeting Bill, haha! Great chapter!

Moonlight Amaryllis
26th August 2012, 7:32 PM
Here I am, with yet another review.

The Goldeen was blasted backwards by the Poison move, and it came to rest right in front of its trainer, who was clad only in swim trunks, and was, for reasons nobody in the group really wanted to know, swimming in the deeper portion of Nugget Swamp. I don't want to know myself.


"Violet?" said Orange.

"What?"

"Shut up."

Violet looked to be at a loss for words, obviously not having expected this. Woah, didn't see that coming. Well, Violt had it coming, didn't she?


Screeching in pain, Mankey swam, with great difficulty, over to the nearest tree, which appeared to be made entirely out of popsicle sticks, duct tape, and toilet seats. Oh, gross.


"When we go back to Ruceelna tonight, we'll stop at the Pokémart," suggested Orange. "Those places will buy literally anything off of a trainer. We sell it there and split the profits three ways, that sound good?" Shouldn't that be capitilized?


"Attack that abomination first!" he ordered. "Diglett! Scratch!"

"Wait a second, Scratch?" asked Orange, as he cast a dubious glance at the Mole Pokémon, who seemed to sport no obvious appendages, let alone anything sharp. "With what?" he asked.

As if in response, Diglett moved forward, plowing its way through the rock, the ceramic tiles, and the aluminum siding, and its nose began to glow. As the nose glowed, it lengthened, coming to a point. Diglett then twisted around in the ground as it approached .4, the point of its nose raking the Caffeine Pokémon's side. I always wondered how they did that...

Anyways, very nice chapter, but there were a few places there could have been more descriptive, and avoid usibg words like "gloop" to describe something. Other than that, very amusing chapter, I eagerly await the next!

Jonah the Slaking
26th August 2012, 10:03 PM
NEW CHAPTER.

I actually had to read this twice. Why? Because I couldn't fathom where toilet seats came from in a world where toilet seats don't exist...

Orange, Orange, Orange...you haven't changed a bit. Or have you?...Nah, you haven't.

Knightfall
27th August 2012, 3:25 AM
Wait? Orange got Violet with the "what? Shut up" thing? Oh God, the end is upon us...

Anyways, great chapter, I'm still within a day, so I'm still on time. I fully intend on making it to 01/01/13 and beyond without missing a chapter.

Bellsprout evolved! About time, everyone else evolved once, so it was natural that it was next. And it hurts to see Charmeleon bested by a Grass Type, but you can't win all the time, especially when you're Wrapped.

Eh, I can't say who I hate more, Team Debug or Team Error. Oh well, they're both idiots, so I guess it doesn't matter.

Can't wait for the next one.

Knightfall signing off ...;005;

rangernumber-x
28th August 2012, 6:54 PM
*stumbles out of the shadows* Um...hi! Due to undisclosed reasons, I have been off the commenting for a while. But now, I am throwing those undisclosed reasons into a conveniently placed trash can. Hurray for conveniently placed trash cans!

Chapter 13: Attack of the 6-Foot Weepinbell This week, on low budget horror movies...

"Violet?" said Orange.

"What?"

"Shut up." The world has just turned on it's head. I have no words.

Screeching in pain, Mankey swam, with great difficulty, over to the nearest tree, which appeared to be made entirely out of popsicle sticks, duct tape, and toilet seats. I first wondered how it could stay together, but then I realised. Duct tape. Duct tape can hold anything together, even branches made out of toilet seats.

"An extremist criminal organisation who tries to wipe out entire races of Pokémon," Violet interrupted. "Thanks, but no thanks." That can pretty much be used to describe any criminal organisation in pokemon. If you include only wanting strong pokemon to exist.

As if in response, Diglett moved forward, plowing its way through the rock, the ceramic tiles, and the aluminum siding, and its nose began to glow. As the nose glowed, it lengthened, coming to a point. Diglett then twisted around in the ground as it approached .4, the point of its nose raking the Caffeine Pokémon's side. I can never quite imagine that.

And then Chompy began to glow. Ok, I am going to be completely honest, and say I saw that coming.

When neither Red nor Violet raised any objections, Orange grinned at them and ran off towards the nearest trainer, challenging him to a battle at the top of his lungs. I don't care how loyal his pokemon become to him, or how long this story goes on for, I am always going to imagine him shouting to train his disobedient spearow.

Well, great chapter like always. But will this mean that, while in Kanto it's called Tohjo falls, here it will be called...Johto falls? Even I don't know how I came up with that. Also, what has always wondered me is why I black out when I lose, yet NPCs always stand there, and wait for more trainers? Anyways, Bye!

Missingno. Master
9th September 2012, 12:15 AM
OK, I had just finished typing up replies to all your comments... and then I accidentally hit a button to move back a page, erasing everything I had typed up. So I'll just say this; the disgustingness of toilet seats depends on how much use they've seen; duct tape is awesome; and the next chapter is coming along nicely, and just might be up tonight. Oh, and as I've started classes, I don't think it'd be wise for any of you to get your hopes up that the slow pace that this fic is taking will improve anytime soon. Rest assured, I won't forget this story.

Missingno. Master
9th September 2012, 3:56 AM
Chapter 14: Return of the Bug Catcher
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"All right, Pidgey! Quick Attack!"

"Spearow, Take Down!"

The two bird Pokémon streaked through the air, each aiming for the other one, fully intending to collide. When they crashed into each other, they fell to the ground. Spearow shakily climbed back onto its small feet, but its opponent, a slightly smaller bird with brown plumage all over, didn't even try to get back up.

"Pidgey, return," sighed the Youngster, holding out a Poké Ball.

"Yeah, we did it, Spearow!" Orange exclaimed happily.

"That is one awesome Spearow you got there," the Youngster said.

"I know, right?" Orange replied, grinning proudly. "Your Pidgey didn't do too bad itself, either."

"Thanks," said the Youngster before walking off, saying something about getting Pidgey to the Pokémon Center.

"Orange, you've been battling every single trainer we've come across since we got out of Nugget Swamp," Violet complained.

"And I beat them all!" Orange declared proudly, missing the point completely.

"What Violet is saying, Orange, is maybe you should give one of us a shot," said Red.

"Oh, what are you guys complaining about?" chuckled Orange. "Between Chompy and Rattata evolving, not to mention Violet catching Koffing, you two did well enough for yourselves in the swamp."

Violet opened her mouth to reply, when a familiar voice greeted their ears.

"Hey! Red, Orange, Violet, that you?"

Red wheeled around, to see a familiar-looking Bug Catcher running towards them. Orange and Violet did the same, and all three of them looked surprised.

"Jimmy?!" exclaimed Orange. "What are you doing here?"

"It is you guys! I decided to start traveling, see if I could get any more Bug-types. There's only so many different kinds in Ivadirin Forest. Just the Caterpie and Weedle families, plus Z4."

"How'd that go, anyway?" asked Violet. "You were gonna try and get a more obedient Z4, weren't you?"

"Yeah.... that didn't exactly pan out that well," Jimmy chuckled weakly. "But I did get some new ones! Who's gonna battle me and see?"

Violet turned to glare at Orange, but for once, the overeager trainer was keeping quiet. Clearly, his fear of Bug-types was starting to overcome his love for battle.

"I'll go," said Violet. "How many Pokemon should we each use?"

"Two each sound good?" asked Jimmy as he took a Poké Ball off his belt.

"Fine by me," smirked Violet as she readied a Poké Ball of her own.

Jimmy threw his ball first. "OK, Venonat! Let's go!"

In a flash of light, the round, fuzzy, purple form of a Venonat materialized. After sizing it up for a second, Violet threw the Poké Ball in her hand. "Go, Flutters!" she called as her Butterfree emerged.

"Hey, Flutters evolved, pretty cool!" grinned Jimmy. "OK, Venonat! Tackle attack!"

"Veno nat!" replied Venonat as it leapt into the air, trying to slam into Flutters.

"Flutters, use your Confusion attack!" Violet ordered.

"Freeh freeeh!" chittered Flutters as it let loose a pair of blue rays of light from its eyes, slamming into the Insect Pokémon with full force, knocking it to the ground.

"Venonat, Tackle again!" ordered Jimmy.

"Flutters, Harden!" Violet called.

As Venonat leapt at the Butterfree once more, Flutters stuck its wings straight out, and its entire body seemed to gleam in the broken, pixelly sunlight for a moment. Venonat bounced off of the Butterfree's body with a resounding CLAAANG and fell backwards. Flutters proceeded to flap its wings again, rising higher into the air.

"Good, Flutters! Now use String Shot!" exclaimed Violet.

"Freeeeeheeeeheeeh!" trilled Flutters as it unleashed several strands of white string from its mouth, quickly wrapping Venonat up in it until it couldn't move anymore.

"Vmmm nmmmt," muffled Venonat.

"No, Venonat! Try a Psybeam!" Jimmy exclaimed desperately.

"Flutters! Tackle it now!" Violet exclaimed, grinning widely. Flutters dove down at the immobilized Venonat, who couldn't seem to launch Psybeam. Venonat was sent flying into Jimmy's arms once the Butterfree slammed into it.

"Venonat, return!" Jimmy exclaimed as he held out the Poké Ball and calling the Insect Pokémon back. Once Venonat had been returned, he replaced the ball with another one and threw it. "OK, that's it! Scyther, let's go!"

"S-s-s-s-scyyyy.... S-s-s-s-scyyyyy..." Orange started gasping as a rather large winged creature emerged from Jimmy's Poké Ball. It stood on two legs, and was brandishing its arms; more specifically, the sharp, shiny, metallic sword blades on the ends of the arms. In what he evidently considered to be a nonchalant manner, Orange moved off to the side until he was directly behind Red.

"Scyther!" shrieked the large bug. Violet held out her Pokédex at her newest opponent.

"Scyther, the Mantis Pokémon," droned the device. "Scyther moves incredibly quickly and shreds its enemy with its razor-sharp scythes. On rare occasions, it flies with its wings."

"Flutters, use your Confusion!" Violet ordered.

"Scyther, Quick Attack!" Jimmy called.

Butterfree prepared to launch beams of psychic energy, but before it could even begin, Scyther began to flap its wings with incredible rapidity, and zipped forward with even greater rapidity, slamming headfirst into the Butterfree and tackling it to the ground.

"Flutters, return!" Violet exclaimed, holding out the Poké Ball and recalling her feebly stirring Butterfree. She quickly took out another ball and launched it. "I choose you, Skulls!"

In a flash of light, Violet's Koffing materialized, "Koffing," it rumbled in a deep voice.

"Koffing, pretty cool," nodded Jimmy. "OK, Scyther, use Wing Attack now!"

"Skulls, Smog attack!" commanded Violet.

"Koffing," replied Skulls as it blasted a thick, dark green fog from the prominent pores all over its body. Scyther had flown right into its fog, and could soon be heard coughing.

"Now, Skulls, Mimic!" Violet called.

Skulls looked down at the Smog cloud, and its skull-and-crossbones pattern briefly glowed with a bright white light. At that moment, Scyther flew out of the cloud, now hovering behind the Koffing.

"Scyther, Slash it!" ordered Jimmy.

"Skulls, Wing Attack!" yelled Violet.

"Koffing!" exclaimed Skulls as two of its pores unleashed plumes of smog. Each cloud formed itself into the shape of a wing as the Koffing began to fly towards the oncoming Scyther. The smog-wings and swordlike blades collided in midair, to general astonishment at just how solid the Koffing's "wings" had turned out to be. After several minutes of struggling, both attacks got through to their respective targets. Skulls smacked Scyther with its "wings", while Scyther sliced at Skulls with its scythes. Both Pokemon fell to the ground after this, neither one of them able to get back up.

"A draw, who'd have guessed?" remarked Orange as both trainers were recalling their Pokémon.

"It's not a draw, though," argued Violet. "Flutters took a lot of damage from Scyther's Quick Attack, but it wasn't knocked out. I'll admit, it was a pretty close match, though!"

"Yeah," grinned Jimmy. "That was a pretty good battle-"

"Sshhh!" hissed Orange, his eyes wide, staring at something behind Jimmy. Red looked, and saw a vaguely familiar rectangular thing floating a foot or so off the ground. It was covered in black, orange, and purple markings.

"Hey, is that-" began Red.

"It's an A," whispered Orange. "I missed my chance back at Rewept City, I'm not about to let this one get away!"

At that moment, however, the A turned to face Orange, and seemed to do a double take upon noticing him, giving a surprised squeak.

"Huh," remarked Violet. "Orange, I think that's the same A from that last time!"

"You think so?" asked Orange, surprised as A began to squeak in a frightened manner, slowly backing away.

And then, suddenly, a net fell over the A from above it. Orange looked up and gasped in outrage, for a pair of Team Error grunts were standing on an aluminum tree limb, looking very pleased with themselves. A, meanwhile, was squeaking in an agitated manner, struggling to free itself from the net.

"Heh heh, nice work, Larry!" laughed one of them. "A are really rare, the boss is gonna be very pleased with this!"

"Hey!" Orange exclaimed. "Team Error! What do you think you're doing?!"

"Hey, it's the twerps again!" said Larry as he and Jeff wheeled around to face them. Then, as one, the duo leapt off the tree branch and landed on the ground expertly, each on one side of the net.

"What we're doing, little boy, I think would be easy enough to understand," sneered Jeff. "We're catching ourselves a new Pokémon!"

"With a net?" scowled Orange. "I don't think so!"

"Hey, Poké Balls are expensive!" whined Larry. "And our salary is pitiful!"

"OK, less talking, more fighting," snapped Jeff as he threw a Poké Ball. "pPkMnp, go!"

"I choose you, 7g!" added Larry, throwing a ball of his own.

The Poké Balls burst open, revealing the horizontal rectangular form of pPkMnp, and the reddish cube that was 7g. Orange took out a Poké Ball of his own, but Jeff slapped Larry upside the head. "OK, wait, why are we battling them when we can just grab A and make a break for it? pPkMnp, use TM04!"

pPkMnp roared as it let loose a plume of purple dust from the top of its body, Everyone tensed up, but the clouds of purple dust didn't even make them cough, and were gone just as soon as they came.

"TM04, a Water-type move with no discernible effect," piped up Violet's Pokédex.

"Hey, they're gone!" exclaimed Orange. "And so is A!"

Indeed, neither Team Error grunt could be seen. A was also gone, along with the net it had been trapped in. pPkMnp and 7g were gone as well.

"We gotta try and find them," stated Violet.

"Yes, we gotta save A!" Orange nodded.

"Hey, maybe I can help," offered Jimmy, holding up a Poké Ball. "Do you have anything that's ever come in contact with that A?" he asked.

"No- wait!" exclaimed Orange as he threw the ball he had been holding. "Spearow, go!"

The Poké Ball burst open, unleashing Orange's Spearow in a flash of white light.

"When I first tried to catch A, it pushed this Spearow in front of the Poké Ball," explained Orange. "But why-"

"This is why," grinned Jimmy, tossing his own Poké Ball into the air. "Weedle, come on out!"

Orange stifled a scream and hastily backed up as Jimmy's Weedle materialized, landing expertly in his trainer's hand.

"Spearow," Jimmy called up, "Can you please come down here? I need Weedle to smell you."

Spearow simply glanced down at Jimmy, the look on its face implying that it thought he was crazy. After a moment, however, Spearow descended, though still regarded Jimmy warily. "OK, Weedle, get the A's scent and lead us to it!" Jimmy said.

"Weedle," replied Weedle as it placed its nose close to Spearow's left wing and sniffed deeply. Weedle then raised its head and sniffed at the air. And then it tensed up, and blasted a String Shot at a nearby tree limb, and swung by the string. Then it broke off that String Shot and fired another one at another tree limb, further away. Weedle continued this, swinging its way off into the distance. Jimmy raced after his Weedle, motioning for the trio to follow. After exchanging highly confused looks, that's just what they did, Spearow following them in the sky.

"What... was that... about?" panted Orange as they caught up with the Bug Catcher.

"Weedle have... an amazing... sense of smell," Jimmy replied as they ran. "Those noses... aren't just... for show, you know. And they... lose this... sense of smell... when they evolve."

"I've often... wondered why... some Bug Catchers... won't evolve... Weedle," remarked Orange.

Several minutes later, they had caught up to Jeff and Larry. The two were walking at a leisurely pace, each one holding one end of A's net. They had obviously called pPkMnp and 7g back to their Poké Balls.

"Stop, thieves!" Orange called out.

"Weedle, String Shot!" exclaimed Jimmy.

"Weeeeedle!" replied Weedle as it fired off several strands of silk from its horn. These strands stuck fast to the backs of the grunts' shirts, and though the strands snapped easily, they caused the grunts to stumble and drop A's net. Undaunted, Jeff and Larry wheeled around, each one now brandishing a Poké Ball.

"How did you catch up with us?" demanded Larry.

"Like we'll tell you," Violet replied coldly.

"Now let that A go!" added Orange.

"Not on your life!" snarled Jeff, throwing the Poké Ball. "pPkMnp, go!"

"You too, 7g!" added Larry.

Once again, the villains' Pokémon materialized, looking as ready for battle as Pokémon without faces could hope to look.

"Spearow, ready?" called Orange.

"Speeearow!" cawed Spearow as it descended, hovering directly in front of Orange.

Red then threw a Poké Ball. "Go, Charmeleon!" he exclaimed.

In a flash of light, Red's Charmeleon appeared. It stood in front of red, claws bared, ready and raring for battle.

"pPkMnp, use Sludge on Charmeleon!" ordered Jeff.

"7g, Double-Edge on Spearow!" called Larry.

"Charmeleon, Flamethrower!" exclaimed Red.

"Spearow, use Take Down!" commanded Orange.

pPkMnp launched a stream of sludge at Charmeleon, who met it with a stream of fire. The attacks collided, neither one letting the other advance any. Meanwhile, 7g and Spearow flew at each other and collided with great force.

"Now use Razor Wind!" Orange called.

"Speearrrow!" cawed Spearow as it flapped its wings rapidly, the wind slicing at 7g. Unknown to anyone other than A, the attack also grazed the net, slicing through a little bit of it.

"More power, Charmeleon!" Red urged.

"Chaaaar!" roared Charmeleon as its Flamethrower intensified, becoming hotter and wider. Slowly, pPkMnp's Sludge was getting pushed back.

"OK, Spearow, Peck it now!" Orange ordered.

"Roooooowwwww!" Spearow screeched as it streaked towards 7g and struck it with its small yet sharp beak, knocking the Slow Pokémon out of the air and onto the ground. At the same time, Charmeleon's Flamethrower won out completely, scorching pPkMnp. Without waiting for orders, Charmeleon then ran at pPkMnp and executed a Scratch attack. It was clear that pPkMnp's injuries had been severe, for not even its incredible Defense helped out; as Charmeleon unleashed Scratch, the Fortress Pokémon fell to the ground."

"Return!" Jeff and Larry exclaimed simultaneously as they withdrew their fallen Pokémon. Then, something unprecedented happened; they readied two other Poké Balls.

"Wait, what?!" Orange exclaimed. "I thought you couldn't afford Poké Balls!"

"We can, we just gotta save our salaries for months in order to get any," replied Jeff as he threw his ball. "Go, 'M!"

"Let's do it, Z4!" added Larry.

Larry's Poké Ball unleashed a Z4, an all-too-familiar sight to the trio (especially Orange, who whimpered slightly at the sight of it, yet stood his ground all the same). Jeff's however, unleashed something Red had only previously seen on his Pokédex's screen. From a side view, it was vaguely L-shaped, but facing them head on, it proved to have a rather narrow body On the part that protruded forward, it sported a pair of wide, square eyes, one on each side of its body, directly above a wide, grinning mouth. The whole thing stood roughly eight feet tall. Though he already knew what it was, Red held his Pokédex out.

"'M, the Shoreline Pokémon," droned his Pokédex. "'M thrive in coastal areas, though are not particularly adept swimmers. It flies through the air with style and grace, and hits with the force of a freight train."

"OK, Charmeleon, hit Z4 with Flamethrower!" ordered Red.

"'M, Water Gun!" exclaimed Jeff.

"Z4, Body Slam!" Larry called out.

"Spearow, use Take Down on 'M now!" commanded Orange.

Charmeleon launched a stream of flame at Z4, but 'M swooped in front of Z4 and launched from its mouth a blast of water, cutting through the Flamethrower like extremely fiery butter, and soaking Charmeleon, who roared its disapproval. Spearow rammed into 'M's side, however, disrupting the attack. As 'M recovered from the attack, Charmeleon continued its Flamethrower, knocking Z4 out.

"OK, 'M, Sky Attack now!" ordered Jeff.

"M M!" trilled 'M as it rose into the air, its entire body taking on a majestic golden glow.

Red and Orange tensed up, both knowing just how powerful a Sky Attack could be. And 'M's reputation for hitting with the force of a freight train did nothing to improve their spirits.

And then a rectangular blur slammed into 'M, disrupting the Sky Attack's charging. Orange's jaw dropped; A had broken free of its net, and had attacked 'M.

"A, you're free!" Orange exclaimed.

A squeaked excitedly and flew in circles over Orange's head. Orange couldn't understand what it was saying, but he got a vague feeling that it seemed grateful for his rescue efforts.

"'M, take them all out!" Jeff exclaimed. "Use Tri Attack!"

"M!" exclaimed 'M as a large, glowing triangle formed in front of it, then flew towards A.

"No! A, dodge it!" Orange exclaimed. A flew straight up into the air, and managed to evade the triangle completely. A then flew at 'M again, landing another light blow. Now it seemed to be going even faster than usual.

"TM40, a Normal-type move," said Orange's Pokédex. "A light, quick blow which increases the user's Speed."

"OK, A!" Orange exclaimed. "Give it a Razor Wind!"

A squeaked loudly as it rotated furiously in midair like a fan, sending a gust of cutting air right at 'M, causing it to screech in discomfort. Then, A began to glow and change shape!

"Is it evolving?" asked Red.

Orange shook his head. "A don't evolve," he replied. "It's using Transform!"

"Wait, Transform?" Red asked, taken by surprise by this news. "I thought only Ditto could learn Transform!"

"Nope. Ditto and A," Violet stated. A stopped glowing at that point, only now it looked identical to 'M.

"A, try a Mega Punch!" Orange called, after quickly consulting his Pokédex for a list of moves the Speed Demon Pokémon could now use. Despite now looking like 'M, A still squeaked like its old self as a thick arm tipped in a large fist seemed to grow out of the top of its body. A then flew at 'M and slammed the fist into the Shoreline Pokémon. 'M was thrown backwards, where it collided with Jeff and Larry, and they were all sent flying into the distance.

"Goodbye, and good riddance!" shouted Violet as A resumed its usual form.

"Wow," sighed Orange. "A, thank you so much!"

A squeaked happily in response as it flew circles around Orange, this time level with his head.

"Orange, I think A wants to go with you," Jimmy pointed out.

"A, is this true?" Orange asked, a look of mild surprise on his face. A nodded, but then put some distance between itself and Orange, and gave a loud squeak.

Orange grinned and nodded, understanding at once. "OK, I get it, you want a battle first," he said as he withdrew Spearow and took out another Poké Ball. "Let's do this, then! .4, go!"

In a flash of light, Orange's .4 appeared, gibbering excitedly and flying in tiny circles, unable to contain its limitless energy.

A made the first move, and launched a barrage of coins. .4 screeched as the metallic projectiles made contact with its diminutive body.

".4, use your TM28 attack!" ordered Orange.

"EEEEEEEEEE!" shrieked .4 as it zoomed in close to A and exploded, sending the Normal/Normal-type flying backwards.

"Good! Now use Wing Attack!" Orange ordered.

Instantly, a pair of wings seemed to appear out of nowhere on .4, one wing coming out of each side. The wings looked as though they were composed of small purple cubes, giving the wings a distinctly blocky appearance. .4 then zoomed forward and struck A with its wings, slamming the Speed Demon Pokémon to the ground.

Orange wasted no time, and launched a red-and-white sphere at the unmoving A. "Poké Ball, go!" he yelled.

The ball struck A, transformed it into a shapeless mass of transparent red energy, and sucked it inside. It then fell to the ground and began to wobble back and forth, a red light blinking on the ball's button the whole time. For a moment, there was total silence as everyone present watched the ball intently. Even .4 seemed to be holding perfectly still. And then, at long last, the ball stopped moving.

"YES!" Orange exploded, cheering loudly as he ran over and scooped up the Poké Ball containing his newest Pokémon. "I did it! A is mine!"

"Nice!" Jimmy exclaimed. "Hey, so what are you guys doing up here, anyway? Meant to ask you that a while ago, but this whole A business got me a little sidetracked."

"Can't say I blame you," shrugged Red.

"We came up this way to train," explained Violet. "We heard that Fansfor Gym's leader uses Psychic-types, and we figured we should toughen up our Pokémon before going there."

"Good thinking," Jimmy remarked as his Weedle crawled onto his shoulder. "I actually came up here to see if I could meet Meg."

"Who?" asked Red.

"...What did you say?" asked Jimmy. "You mean you don't know who Meg is? Meg Abytte, the extremely cute creator of the Pokémon PC Storage System? ...At-at least, that's what I hear," he added, blushing slightly.

"Riiiiight," Orange said with a smirk on his face as he winked knowingly at the Bug Catcher. This only served to increase the amount of red growing on his face.

"Yes, well, ahem, so, that's where I'm headed," Jimmy said.

"You know what? I think we'll come with you," Orange said. "She did, after all, invent the PC Storage System, it might be good for us to visit her."

"I thought we were supposed to be training today?" asked Violet, a rather irritated look on her face.

"We've been training all day," Orange said dismissively. "Anyway, it can't be that far, right, Jimmy?"

"Not that far, I don't think," Jimmy said as his blushing went away somewhat. "I think it's only a short walk from here."

"Great, then let's go!" Orange exclaimed. With that, the four trainers headed off in the direction indicated by Jimmy.

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End of Chapter 14.

Jonah the Slaking
9th September 2012, 2:52 PM
You mean no one commented on this yesterday???

I knew Orange would get A! I KNEW IT ALL ALONG! AHAHA...AHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Ahem...anyway, that's a creative take on Weedle. I always thought that was their mouth, though, and that their jaws are just kinda hidden on the bottom or something.

Missingno. Master
9th September 2012, 3:52 PM
I knew Orange would get A! I KNEW IT ALL ALONG! AHAHA...AHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Yeah, that had been the plan from the start. I was actually initially considering letting Orange catch A the first time they met, but then I had the idea that was inserted into this chapter, and it kinda went where it went from there.


Ahem...anyway, that's a creative take on Weedle. I always thought that was their mouth, though, and that their jaws are just kinda hidden on the bottom or something.
It's actually derived from Weedle's Pokedex entries from R/S/E (which, by the way, explicitly state that the big red thing is their nose). I've always wanted to make use of Weedle's sense of smell somehow, and this seemed like the perfect opportunity.

I've had that elusive combination of free time and inspiration, by the way, and the next chapter is coming along amazingly. I've been working on it last night and this morning. If all goes well, I might be able to post it very soon.

Jonah the Slaking
9th September 2012, 3:57 PM
It's actually derived from Weedle's Pokedex entries from R/S/E (which, by the way, explicitly state that the big red thing is their nose). I've always wanted to make use of Weedle's sense of smell somehow, and this seemed like the perfect opportunity.

Curse R/S/E's lack of Weedles for me to have known this.

Missingno. Master
9th September 2012, 3:59 PM
And when I say very soon, I mean very soon, apparently. Don't get too used to this new fast pace, though, remember, it is the weekend.


Chapter 15: A Meeting With Meg
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"I am not!"

"You are too!"

"I am not!"

"You are too!"

"I am not!"

"You are too!" exclaimed Orange. "Just admit it, Jimmy, you are in love with Meg."

"I'm not!" insisted Jimmy, who had been blushing the entire time. "The PC Storage System is an absolute necessity for any trainer, and I just wanted to meet the person responsible for it!"

"Uh huh," smirked Orange. "Yeah. That's the entire reason, right?"

"Orange?" said Violet.

"Yes?"

"Shut up."

Orange stopped pestering Jimmy, and for the remainder of the walk, contented himself with grumbling under his breath and shooting the occasional glare at Violet.

True to Jimmy's word, the walk was indeed short. They came upon a relatively small building that seemed to be built entirely out of old computer parts and an assortment of pine cones.

"I think this might be the place," remarked Orange.

"It's the only house up this way," shrugged Red. Jimmy walked up to a cluster of keyboards held together with duct tape which seemed to function as a door, and knocked on it.

"Come in," came a female voice from inside. Jimmy opened up the door and led the way inside.

The interior was somewhat cluttered. A number of notebooks were piled in various areas all over the room. In the back, a pair of large steel cylinders were constructed. A thin metal pipe ran between the two structures, connecting them, and each one had a door on the front. As if to complete the chaotic picture, a .4 was zipping all around the room. As soon as it noticed the group, however, it flew in front of them, still moving constantly. And then, nobody could have expected what happened next.

It spoke to them.

"Oh, hey there, I'm glad someone's here," the .4 seemed to say in the same female voice they had heard earlier. "I need some help."

"I think I need some professional help," muttered Orange. "It sounded like that .4 was talking to us."

"I am," the .4 insisted. "I'm not a Pokémon. I'm Meg Abytte. I was conducting an experiment in teleportation, and I got combined with my .4 by accident. Please, can't one of you help me?"

"Sure, I'll help," Jimmy said, stepping forward. "My name's Jimmy, what do I have to do?" he asked.

"OK, I'm going to enter the chamber on the right," explained the .4. "Once I do that, you go to my computer over there and activate the teleporter. That should do the trick, OK?"

"Got it," nodded Jimmy. The .4 floated over to the door of the steel chamber on the right side of the room, and pushed at it. It didn't budge.

"Um, Miss Abytte, should I-?" began Jimmy.

"No matter," the .4 replied. "I've always wanted to try this anyway. TM28!!!"

The .4 backed up and let off a minor explosion. It was just enough to force the door open. It then floated into the chamber and pushed the door closed again. Jimmy walked over to a wooden table in front of the left chamber. On the screen, there was a large red button labeled "Activate Teleportation System". Jimmy took the computer mouse and clicked the button. Immediately, a humming noise could be heard from the steel device in the back of the room, as something seemed to be transferred from right to left. Then, the door to the left chamber opened up, and a young woman walked out, sighing in relief. She looked to be about Violet's age, if not a year or two older, and had waist-length wavy brown hair.

"Oh, thank you so much," she said as she walked over to Jimmy, who seemed incapable of forming a coherent response; he was too busy staring at Meg, mouth slightly agape. "Your name is Jimmy, you said, right?"

"Uh... Wha... Oh! Oh, yeah, yes, my name's Jimmy. Jimmy Errorcode," Jimmy replied, seeming to snap out of it, though he was blushing once again. "It's... it's a pleasure to... to meet you, Miss Abytte. Oh, yes, these are my friends, uh... um..."

"I'm Violet Scramble," Violet said, rolling her eyes at Jimmy. "This is Orange McPixel and this is Red Vershunn.

"Uh... hi..." murmured Orange. Violet turned to look at Orange, to discover that he was also staring at Meg, mouth slightly agape. Irritated by this, Violet snapped her fingers in Orange's face. When this failed to yield results, she instead opted to stomp on his foot. That snapped him out of it.

As Orange hopped around, clutching his afflicted foot and holding back what was sure to be a whole host of expletives, Red shook Meg's hand. "Nice to meet you," he said.

"Nice to meet all of you," smiled Meg. "So, I'm guessing you're all Trainers?"

"We are," replied Violet. "I'm afraid I haven't used your storage system yet, though. I only have four Pokémon."

"Nor have I," confessed Red. "Only three Pokémon."

Orange said nothing, clearly not trusting himself to not start cursing over his injured foot, but shook his head and shrugged, as if to say that he hasn't used the PC Storage System either.

"I haven't either," admitted Jimmy. "I only have three. This Weedle on my shoulder, plus a Venonat and a Scyther."

"Oh, a Venonat!" Meg exclaimed, her eyes lighting up. "Those are so cute, may I see it?"

"Sure!" Jimmy said as he took out a Poké Ball and tossed it straight up. The ball split open, unleashing Jimmy's Venonat into the room. Meg let out a little squeal of delight, and scooped the Venonat into her arms and hugged it.

"Oh, Venonat are so cuuute," she sighed.

"Veno veno nat," said Venonat, seeming to enjoy the attention.

"Wow," remarked Jimmy. "It's... it's not often I meet a girl who appreciates Bug Pokémon. Most of the ones I've met are creeped out by Bug-types. And not just girls, either, Orange here is downright afraid of them."

"OH, SHUT UP!" roared Orange.

"Oh, I love Bug-types," Meg said as she turned her attention to the Weedle on Jimmy's shoulder and started to stroke its back with her index finger. Immediately, the Weedle gave a contented sigh and relaxed. "Venonat's my favorite, but I love them all."

"You... you like... all... Bug-types..." Jimmy murmured, as if not daring to believe this.

"Oh, yes," Meg said, addressing her guests. "I want to thank you all for helping me out."

"Oh, well, it was really just Jimmy," Violet replied modestly.

"Vi, shut up, we might be getting free stuff," hissed Orange, earning himself a reproving glare from Violet.

"No, don't worry about it," smiled Meg as she produced three strips of cardboard from the pocket of her shorts. "I had won three tickets for the S.S. Nean cruise ship, but I get seasick really easily. The only thing is, I only have the three tickets, and there are four of you..."

"Actually, you can give them to Red, Orange and Violet," said Jimmy. "I, um... Miss Abytte..."

"Please, call me Meg," said Meg.

"...Meg... I was wondering if maybe... I could stay here for a while? Help you with anything you might need help with? I mean, I'm not very knowledgeable about computers, but I'd be... willing to learn..."

"You know, I've been meaning to take on an assistant," said Meg thoughtfully. "And, well, you are really nice, so sure, I'd have no problem with you staying here." She then handed the tickets to Orange, Violet, and Red.

"Thanks," said Red. "Just one question- where does the S.S. Nean dock, anyway?"

"She makes port in Miliovern once a year," replied Meg. "She stays in port for about a week before setting sail again, and during that week, the crew hosts a party for Pokémon Trainers."

"A party?" Orange repeated, his interest piqued. "Well, what are we waiting for? Let's get going!" He grabbed Violet and Red's arms and practically dragged them out the door, giving them barely two seconds to hastily say good-bye to Meg and Jimmy.

Once they were out the door, Violet wrenched her arm free of Orange's grip. "OK, what the hell was that?" she demanded.

"What? What was what?" asked Orange defensively.

"You know perfectly well what was what," said Violet. "You were staring at her stupidly, mouth agape and everything."

"I was not," scoffed Orange.

"Yes you were."

"No I wasn't."

"Yes you were."

"No I wasn't!"

"Yes you were"

"Was not!"

"Were too!"

"Was not!"

"Were too!"

"Was not!'

"Were not!"

"Was too!"

"Were not!"

"Was too!"

"Were not!"

"Yes, I was!" Orange exclaimed defiantly. "I was staring at Meg like a horny, drooling idiot, and don't you dare tell me otherwise!"

"OK," smirked Violet as she calmly proceeded to walk down a narrow path labeled as a shortcut back to Ruceelna City. Orange and Red followed, the former somewhat confused as to what exactly happened. Then a look of dawning comprehension came over his face.

"Hey, wait a minute!" he exclaimed.

"Sorry, Orange, you already admitted to it," chuckled Violet.

"You tricked me into saying that!"

"Oh, did I?" asked Violet. "I was under the impression I just tricked you into saying you were staring at Meg. From where I stand, that part about being a 'horny, drooling idiot' was all you."

"RRRRRGH!" replied Orange through gritted teeth, which only made Violet laugh in a self-satisfied way. Even Red chuckled a little bit, which fortunately went unnoticed by Orange.

About fifteen minutes and one jump off of an eight-foot ledge later, the trio arrived back in Ruceelna City.

"It's getting late," Violet remarked. Indeed, it was starting to get dark. "I think we should go to the Pokémon Center for dinner, and then turn in for the night."

"I'm all for that," Orange nodded. "Only, I'd like us to go to the Pokémart first, cash in that Nugget we won. Red, you still got it?"

"Right here," Red responded as he pulled the solid gold sphere out of his backpack.

"Oh, come on, Red," sighed Violet. "That can wait until tomorrow."

"Oh, Tauros crap," snapped Orange. "We got plenty of time!"

Red looked back and forth between Violet and Orange, both of whom seemed to be awaiting his decision. Red gulped. He didn't like being put in this position.

"Well..." he began. "I mean... Uh... I mean, does it really matter, either way? Orange, I mean, what would be so bad about waiting until morning?"

"Hmph. Nothing, I guess," Orange grunted, though he looked distinctly disgruntled at Red's decision. "Sure, take her side," he added in an undertone as they headed towards the Pokémon Center.

"I don't want to take sides!" Red whispered indignantly. "No matter what I decided, I'd have gotten one of you pissed at me, and I don't want to do that! You're both my friends, I don't want to have to take sides against either one of you!"

"So why'd you take her side?" demanded Orange.

"I only intended it as an example," replied Red. "Violet's the one who ran with it."

Orange said nothing, though this answer seemed to satisfy him.

Once they reached the Pokémon Center, they entered the cafeteria and ordered dinner. Violet had an even number salad, triggering Orange's usual remarks about her being an evenetarian; Red had a seven burger with eight sauce; Orange had a plate of fried nines, much to Violet's exasperation.

"Fried nines again, Orange?" groaned Violet. "One of these days you're gonna wake up, and you'll have turned into a nine."

"Oh, quit nagging," said Orange. "Nothing wrong with having my favorite food."

"Orange, I swear, if we were married, I would put poison in your coffee." Violet sighed.

"Violet, I swear, if we were married, I'd drink it," Orange retorted.

The meal was pretty quiet after that. Once the center's Chansey had scanned their Pokédexes for identification purposes, the trio asked the nurse for a room, and were able to get the same room they had the previous night. Before going to sleep, Red made sure to take the earplugs Violet had given him and put them in his ears. Sure enough, even though Orange fell asleep first, even though the cacophony his mouth was producing was not unlike that of heavy machinery, Red had no problem getting to sleep, hearing only total silence.
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The next morning, Red found himself being awoken, not by Orange's snores as he was starting to get used to, but by Orange yanking the sheets off of him.

"C'mon, Red, get up!" he exclaimed once Red groggily removed his earplugs. "Breakfast! Come on!"

Red got out of his bed and sluggishly got dressed. By the time the trio went for breakfast, he was much more awake and alert, and the fried nines and four juice he had for breakfast helped even more. Once they left the Pokémon Center, Orange spoke up.

"OK, after we hit the Pokémart, where to?" he asked.

"Well, we got in a good amount of training," Violet said. "Maybe we should head for Fansfor City now."

"But wait, what about the S.S. Nean?" asked Red. "Doesn't she set sail at the end of the week? If we're gonna make it to the party, shouldn't that be our first priority?"

"I'd have thought you'd want to get through the region quickly," Violet remarked. "Get to Bincanar Island faster and all that."

Red shrugged. "I do want some answers, but I'm starting to like Tanko. I wouldn't mind making a couple of detours."

"I'm all for that!" declared Orange. "Besides, a ship full of Pokémon Trainers can only mean one thing- battles! No such thing as too much training, am I right?"

"You got a point," conceded Violet. "OK, let's head for Miliovern City first."

"Second," Orange said suddenly. "First, the Pokémart."

"Fine," sighed Violet. With that, Orange led the way down a number of streets until they reached a building constructed entirely out of orange traffic cones, sheet metal, and glue sticks. A wooden sign was attached to the wall, with "Pokémart" painted on it in large red letters.

"I think we've arrived," said Orange.

"Yeah, you think?" said Violet sarcastically as she led the way in through a door made of sheet metal and duct tape.

The inside of the Pokémart was small and cluttered. Entire shelves of Poké Balls and Potions made navigation somewhat difficult. In one corner, a balding man was leaning on a wooden counter.

"Welcome to the Ruceelna City Pokémart," he said in a bored voice that implied he had said this many times before. "Are you buying or selling?"

"Selling," replied Red as he took the Nugget out of his backpack. The man took the golden sphere and eyed it from multiple angles, as if uncertain as to its authenticity. Finally, he took an odd scanning device from behind the counter and pointed i t at the Nugget. It hummed for a second, then made a dinging noise. Seemingly satisfied with this, the man paid Red 6,000 Pokédollars for the Nugget.

"Wow, 6,000!" Red whispered as they exited the Pokémart. They didn't have any of that 6,000 on them anymore- the three had unanimously decided to use the profits to replenish their dwindling Poké Ball supplies. "I don't think Nuggets sell for that much back in Kanto."

"Hey, it bought us more Poké Balls," shrugged Orange. "Can't complain about that. I had no idea I was down to just one! What would I have done if that one had failed? I mean, when a Poké Ball fails to catch a Pokémon-"

"We know, Orange, it explodes," sighed Violet.

"So, which way to Miliovern City?" asked Red.

"Should be south of here," Orange replied. "We'll have to pass through Fansfor to get there, though."

"And we can't just swing by the Gym and challenge the leader while we're passing through because...?" asked Red.

"...Huh," Orange muttered. "I guess we can."

Violet facepalmed.
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Half an hour of walking later, the trio had left Ruceelna City, and very quickly found themselves facing a large mass of skyscrapers that seemed to be made up of rocks, pieces of fencing, and tree limbs, complete with leaves. Barring their way into the city was a tall fence made of sheet metal, fives, and nines, and a large building made of wooden planks and soda cans. An open doorway faced the group, and through it they could see that the building would lead them directly into Fansfor City. Orange led the way inside-

"Oh, no, no, no, you do not," came a voice. As one, the trio turned to their left, where they saw a rather pudgy security guard sitting behind a counter. "Sorry, road's closed."

"Why?" asked Orange.

"Because I'm hungry," the guard answered.

"So wait," Red frowned. "You're not letting us into Fansfor City because you're hungry?"

"That about sums it up, yeah," the guard replied.

"Come on!" whined Orange. "We gotta get through Fansfor City to get to Miliovern!"

"Take the bridge," suggested the security guard. "There's a bridge that takes you straight across Fansfor."

Orange stormed out of the gatehouse, grumbling audibly and saying rather unkind things about the security guard's mother. Reluctantly, Violet and Red followed.

Outside the gatehouse, Red now noticed a wooden staircase to his left, which seemed to lead to a metal walkway. Violet led the way up the stairs, but once they got to the top, and were faced with the prospect of crossing the relatively narrow bridge many feet above a large, bustling city, Violet hesitated. The bridge had handrails made out of plastic water bottles, so the risk of falling was minimal.

"Violet, what's wrong?" asked Red.

"N-nothing," Violet said. "It's just... a little high up, isn't it?"

"Just close your eyes," Red suggested. "You're not gonna fall, you know we wouldn't let that happen."

"Yeah.... Yeah..." Violet replied. She gulped, then squeezed her eyes shut and began to make her way slowly across the bridge. Orange was not pleased with this slow pace, and made a point of miming the action of checking a nonexistent watch every couple of seconds. Red ignored him, and since Violet kept her eyes shut, she had to ignore him as well.

Ten minutes later, they had crossed the bridge. Violet raced down the staircase, breathing heavily, and once they were all back on the ground, she held onto Red for support.

"I'm guessing you don't like heights too much, Violet?" asked Red.

"N-not really," sighed Violet.

"And you mock me for my fear of bugs," Orange smirked.

"Hey, a fear of heights is a legitimate thing!" snapped Violet. "You're scared of stuff like Caterpie and Metapod and Paras!"

"And Beedrill, and Scyther, and Z4," Orange shot back defensively.

"Oh, please, you're scared of any Bug-type and you know it," said Violet.

"Not any Bug-type!" said Orange. "You don't see me cowering in fear of your Butterfree, do you? Those are OK!"

Violet said nothing more at this. Once she stopped holding onto Red, they continued walking. A swarm of .4 flew overhead, and several Pidgey could be seen pecking at a small patch of grass. Then, they all stopped short, for a large Pokémon was crossing the concrete/water/seven-paved road, and was taking its sweet time doing so. It walked on a pair of skinny legs tipped with bird feet. Its torso was spherical and covered in brown feathers. From the top it sported not one, but two long, black necks, each one tipped with a brown, spherical head. Each head sported a pair of beady, black eyes, and a large, yellow beak.

"Wow, a Doduo!" Red exclaimed, holding out his Pokédex.

"Doduo, the Twin Bird Pokémon," said Red's Pokédex. "Doduo is more skilled at running than flying. It runs at speeds up to 60 miles per hour and leaves giant footprints."

"Pretty cool," remarked Orange. He considered going for a Poké Ball, but Red had beaten him to it.

"Go, Paras!" Red called as he launched a red-and-white sphere, unleashing the Bug/Grass-type. This caught the Doduo's attention, and made both heads turn to face it.

Doduo made the first move, Both heads lowered, and the whole thing charged forward.

"Paras, Stun Spore!" Red ordered.

"Paaaaraaaas!" exclaimed Paras as it unleashed a yellow dust from its mushrooms. Doduo dashed right into the yellow cloud and immediately toppled to the ground, the Stun Spore having successfully stopped the Skull Bash.

"OK, Paras, now use Scratch!" commanded Red.

"Paras par!" Paras replied as it scuttled towards Doduo and took a great swipe at its spherical torso, causing both heads to squawk in pain. Then the heads turned to face Paras and both began to peck at it mercilessly.

"That's Doduo's Fury Attack," stated Violet.

"Paras!" called Red, just as his Pokémon started to glow. Orange slowly backed up and hid behind Violet as the glow faded, revealing Paras to have evolved. What now stood in Paras's place sported one giant mushroom covering its entire back. It was slightly bigger than Paras had been, but other than that and the mushroom, it was relatively unchanged.

"Parasect, the Mushroom Pokémon, and the evolved form of Paras," droned Red's Pokédex. "Parasect spreads a variety of spores from the mushroom on its back. It prefers damp spaces."

"Cool," grinned Red. Then he noticed something as the Pokédex displayed the list of Parasect's attacks. "Hey, guys, what is it with Pokémon learning new moves just after evolving, anyway? It always seems to happen."

Orange and Violet shrugged. "No idea," said Violet. "So Parasect learned something new?"

"Looks like it," grinned Red. "Use Spore!"

"Sect!" hissed Parasect as it unleashed a plume of blue dust from beneath its giant mushroom. Immediately, Doduo slumped to the ground, both heads asleep. Red took the cue at once, and produced an empty Poké Ball from his backpack.

"Poké Ball, go!" Red shouted as he hurled the sphere. Parasect scuttled out of the way as the ball made contact with Doduo, turned it into red energy, and sucked it in. The ball fell to the ground and wobbled back and forth for several tense seconds, before falling still.

"Nice," grinned Orange as Red scooped up the ball.

"Yeah!" Red exclaimed. "I did it, Doduo is mine!"

"Para Parasect!" added Parasect before Red called it back into its Poké Ball.

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End of Chapter 15.

SneaselFTW
9th September 2012, 4:25 PM
"Wow, 6,000!" Red whispered as they exited the Po Bkémart. They didn't have any of that 6,000 on them anymore- the three had unanimously decided to use the profits to replenish their dwindling Poké Ball supplies. "I don't think Nuggets sell for that much back in Kanto."

I think thats meant to be Pokemart.

Anyway, a good two chapters, I think I like A. I got confused for a bit when Team Error caught A.
Thay caught A in a net and i was thinking, wait, caught what? Oh yeah...

Anyway, good chapters!

Jonah the Slaking
9th September 2012, 8:31 PM
...Well.
...That escalated quickl--*shot*

Why would Orange be afraid of Caterpie, and not of Butterfree? Butterfree have psychic powers and could just as easily tear your head off as look at you. Not to mention they have enough power in their wings to whip up a whirlwind.

I know it worked out just fine, but why would Red send in a Paras against a Flying type? One that, if I'm not mistaken, starts with Peck?

One last thing. I think it makes more sense for the gatekeepers to have blocked the road because of Team Rocket/Error/Debug/whoever. This is nerfed, however, when they let you through just for giving them a drink.

Rotomknight
9th September 2012, 8:43 PM
Great work as always,
why doduo?

Missingno. Master
9th September 2012, 11:10 PM
I think thats meant to be Pokemart.
Yep, fixed. I don't even want to know how I ended up with that one. Thanks.


Anyway, a good two chapters, I think I like A. I got confused for a bit when Team Error caught A.
Thay caught A in a net and i was thinking, wait, caught what? Oh yeah...
LOL, yeah, that might start getting confusing.


Anyway, good chapters!
Thanks!


Why would Orange be afraid of Caterpie, and not of Butterfree? Butterfree have psychic powers and could just as easily tear your head off as look at you. Not to mention they have enough power in their wings to whip up a whirlwind.
Butterfree is, for reasons that may or may not be touched upon later, the sole exception to Orange's fear of bugs.


I know it worked out just fine, but why would Red send in a Paras against a Flying type? One that, if I'm not mistaken, starts with Peck?
Because of Stun Spore. Doduo are fast and he knows it. He wanted to rob it of that advantage from the start.


One last thing. I think it makes more sense for the gatekeepers to have blocked the road because of Team Rocket/Error/Debug/whoever. This is nerfed, however, when they let you through just for giving them a drink.
I like to portray the Saffron/Fansfor gatekeepers as the lazy *******es they come across as. And in Tanko, they're not thirsty, they're hungry. :)


Great work as always,
why doduo?
Thanks!

As for why Doduo, everyone is going to have a Pokemon with Fly in the end. Even Violet, which will allow for a little development as far as her fear of heights. Orange already has Spearow, and Pidgey is, in my opinion, a little too common for trainers. Plus, I have an idea as to how to portray the Doduo line using Fly. Violet's Fly user will be a Glitch Pokemon, BTW.

Darkened_Kingdra
10th September 2012, 2:20 AM
Awesome so far . gonna get an A no matter what you saaaatty"6!8"7?'5!8))777?7)7799;+'--;…/-

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Tyoyo3131
10th September 2012, 4:17 AM
Plus, I have an idea as to how to portray the Doduo line using Fly. Violet's Fly user will be a Glitch Pokemon, BTW.

I am expecting nothing less than the Doduo-copter. I've been reading from the side lines, and I just wanted to say good work.

Knightfall
10th September 2012, 4:46 AM
Alright, I'm a little later then a day after it was posted, but how cares? I'm here.

And unfortunately, it's going to be a quick one.

First, I'm impressed at the two chapters in a weekend, good job. Second, nice use of Weedle, I always knew it was a nose. And I enjoyed seeing Jimmy again. I hope we see more of him, but unless he has errends to run for Meg that cross paths with the others.
Thirdly, I laughed at how you handled the security guards and the sky bridge, something like that wouldn't have occured to me.

Anyways, great set of chapters, I'm sorry for the rush,

Knightfall signing off ...;005;

Zibdas
10th September 2012, 1:43 PM
"Hey, so what are you guys doing up here, anyway? Meant to ask you that a while ago, but this whole A business got me a little sidetracked.
Missign some quotation marks here

Good chapter, even if it took a while. I'm just wibndering what devious purposes Doduo will be put through...

Missingno. Master
18th September 2012, 2:32 PM
Awesome so far . gonna get an A no matter what you saaaatty"6!8"7?'5!8))777?7)7799;+'--;…/-

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Glad you like it. Or... liked it... y'know... before going boom and all.


I am expecting nothing less than the Doduo-copter. I've been reading from the side lines, and I just wanted to say good work.
Thanks, glad you like it! As for how Doduo will fly, just wait and see.


Alright, I'm a little later then a day after it was posted, but how cares? I'm here.

And unfortunately, it's going to be a quick one.

First, I'm impressed at the two chapters in a weekend, good job. Second, nice use of Weedle, I always knew it was a nose. And I enjoyed seeing Jimmy again. I hope we see more of him, but unless he has errends to run for Meg that cross paths with the others.
Thirdly, I laughed at how you handled the security guards and the sky bridge, something like that wouldn't have occured to me.

Anyways, great set of chapters, I'm sorry for the rush,

Knightfall signing off ...;005;
Well, don't get too used to one chapter right after the other, that'll only happen during those rare times when I have sufficient motivation and free time to write that much. Glad you like them!


Missign some quotation marks here

Good chapter, even if it took a while. I'm just wibndering what devious purposes Doduo will be put through...
Thanks, I'll fix those.

Next chapter is coming along decently. Expect it some time this week. It might even be out today, but I make no promises.

Missingno. Master
18th September 2012, 7:54 PM
Chapter 16: Family Feud Reunion
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"Doduo, Skull Bash!"

"Spearow, Take Down!"

Spearow dove down and flew low to the ground as it streaked towards Doduo, who was also charging at its adversary, heads lowered. Both birds collided and were thrown backwards by the attacks they had been subjected to.

"Let's do it, Spearow! Peck attack!" ordered Orange.

"Doduo, use your own Peck!" called Red.

"Do do!"cawed Doduo's heads as it charged at Spearow once more. Spearow met it in the middle and they proceeded to peck at each other. Doduo got the upper hand fairly quickly; having two heads gave it a slight advantage.

"Don't give in, Spearow, Razor Wind!" shouted Orange.

"Whirlwind now!" Red commanded.

Spearow started flapping its wings, but Doduo cawed loudly, and large amounts of wind were expelled from their beaks, blowing Spearow back. As the Tiny Bird Pokémon struggled to stay steady in the turbulent wind, it started to glow and change shape!

"Aw, yeah!" Orange exclaimed, a wide grin on his face. "I had a feeling this was coming!" Sure enough, as the glow faded, Spearow was no more. In its place, a larger bird with a much more impressive wingspan hovered, having no problem going up against Doduo's Whirlwind. It had a longer, sharper beak to rival either one of Doduo's, and its entire body was covered in light brown plumage. Atop its head was a small, spiky red crest.

"Feeeeeaaaaaroooowwww!" it cawed loudly.

"Fearow, the Beak Pokémon, and the evolved form of Spearow," droned Orange's Pokédex. "Fearow's large and magnificent wings allow it to keep aloft without ever having to land or rest."

"Awesome!" Orange exclaimed. "Fearow, let's do it! Fury Attack!"

"Roooowwww!" Fearow screeched as it dive-bombed Doduo, giving it zero time to react before striking with its beak repeatedly.

"Come on, Doduo, use your own... Fury... Attack," Red said weakly as his Doduo fell to the ground and fainted.

"OK, Doduo is unable to battle, so Orange and Fearow win!" declared Violet from the sidelines.

"Doduo, return," Red sighed as he held out the Poké Ball, returning the Twin Bird Pokémon to it.

"Nice job, Fearow," Orange exclaimed as he withdrew his own Pokémon.

"That was pretty good," Violet said to both Orange and Red. "Both of you."

"Thanks," replied Red.

"OK, let's get going, Miliovern isn't much farther ahead!" Orange exclaimed excitedly.

"Orange, we got all day," sighed Red. "What's the rush?"

"He used to live in Miliovern before his family moved to Talpel," explained Violet. "When I first met him, he was... really unhappy about the move, to say the least."

"Oh, I handled it fine," Orange said dismissively.

"Uh huh," Violet smirked. "I seem to recall you ordering your mother's pet Pikachu to blow them all back to Miliovern with ThunderShock."

Orange's face reddened. "OK, maybe I took it a little hard."

"A little?" Violet repeated skeptically. "The first night you were there, I seem to recall you screaming throughout the entire night, about how you'd rather die than sleep in a strange house or something like that?"

"I was five!" Orange exclaimed. He then wheeled around and proceeded to march down the path, intent on reaching Miliovern City.

"Hey, Violet, I was wondering," said Red, "How did you and Orange become friends, anyway? I mean, if he was still that annoying back then... I dunno, it just got me wondering."

Violet sighed as she thought back. "Well, here's what happened..." she began.
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Nine years ago...

A five-year-old girl was wandering down the streets of Talpel Town. She wore a dark purple jacket, and her long black hair was put in a ponytail. And she was bored. Violet had a tendency to be somewhat bossy, so not many other kids her age liked to play with her. In her boredom, she hadn't noticed that she was now wandering an alley between two large buildings. At least, not until a trio of adults surrounded her, each one clad in identical purple uniforms.

"Well, well, well," sneered one of them. "Little girls aren't supposed to interfere with grown-up business."

"Get out of my way," snapped five-year-old Violet. "I don't care about your grown-up business."

"Oooh, she's a fresh one," chuckled another one of the men. "You know what, little girl? I think it's time Team Error taught you some respect!" At this, each of them took out a Poké Ball. Now, Violet looked worried. The three men prepared to throw the balls, when-

"Hey! Team Error! Suck voltage!" came a shrill yell in a voice Violet had heard many times before. "Pikachu, ThunderShock!"

The Team Error grunts spun around to spot a five-year-old redheaded boy standing at the other end of the alley. More importantly, they also spotted the small, yellow Pokémon standing with him. And even more importantly, they also noticed the sparks of electricity crackling from its red cheeks.

"Hey, whoa, whoa, wait-" they began.

"Pikaaaa... CHUUUUUU!" bellowed the Pikachu as the grunts lit up with electricity, then collapsed in a heap. Wasting no time, Violet ran around them and stopped only when she was next to the boy.

"Hey, you OK?" asked Orange. "Those guys are bad news!"

Violet sniffed. "I didn't ask to be saved."

"I didn't say you had a choice in the matter," retorted Orange. "I didn't see you doing anything to stop them. I've seen you around here before, we're neighbors."

"I know," said Violet. "I heard you screaming all night last week."

"I didn't want to move here," said Orange. "We used to live in Miliovern City, but we moved here last week. I'm Orange McPixel."

"I'm Violet Scramble. So is this your Pikachu?" asked Violet as she crouched down to scratch the Electric-type behind the ears.

"Nah, Pikachu here is a family pet," replied Orange as Pikachu sighed contentedly, pleased with the attention. "I'm not old enough to own my own Pokémon yet, but when I am, I'm gonna become a Pokémon Trainer!"

"Hey, me too!" Violet exclaimed. "Only I'll be better than you!"

"Oh yeah?"

"Yeah!"

"Oh yeah?!"

"Yeah!"

"OH YEAH?!"

"Orange?"

"Yeah?"

"Shut up."

A somewhat lengthy silence followed this. After about a minute of watching the feebly stirring Team Error grunts, Orange spoke up again.

"So, wanna play?"

"OK."

The two walked off, Pikachu following close behind, leaving the Team Error grunts as they tried to get to their feet, muttering various words that wouldn't have been appropriate for the two five-year-olds to hear.
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"Huh," remarked Red. "So basically, you two were the only ones in town who could put up with each other?"

"I guess so," shrugged Violet. "Nobody else ever wanted to play with Orange because he was so annoying, and I used to be rather bossy, so that didn't help my case much either."

"So, why is Orange so scared of Bug-types, anyway?" Red asked quietly. At this, Violet smirked.

"Well, when he was six-" she began.

"VIOLET! I SWEAR TO MEW, IF YOU TELL HIM-!" Orange exclaimed suddenly, despite him being a good distance in front of Violet and Red, and thus seemingly out of earshot.

"How did he do that?" Red wondered out loud.
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After another fifteen minutes of walking, Orange came to a stop, as they approached the top of a small hill. From there, they could see a sprawling city before them, and on the other side, the vast expanse of the sea.

"We made it!" Orange exclaimed. "Miliovern City! Just like I remembered it!"

"Well then," said Red, "I say we hit up the Pokémon Center first. Doduo could use a bit of a rest after that battle."

"Yeah, Fearow too," stated Orange. "Though I doubt we'll be using either one of them against the Miliovern Gym Leader."

"Why?" asked Violet. After a short pause, she sighed, "You know what type the Gym Leader uses, don't you?"

"Hey, I used to live here, what do you expect?" said Orange. "The Gym Leader's my cousin, she uses Electric-types."

Red and Violet exchanged somewhat surprised glances at this news. Neither one of them had guessed that Orange would be related to the Gym Leader.

Once they reached the Pokémon Center, the nurse was more than glad to treat everybody's Pokémon. A mere half hour later, she pronounced them all to be fighting fit.

"OK, let's go!" Orange exclaimed. "Miliovern Gym! Let's move!"

"Wait, what about the S.S. Nean?" asked Red. "When does she set sail?"

"Not until tomorrow night," Orange said dismissively. "We can get in our Gym battles today and still have all day tomorrow to party on the ship."

"It's getting a little late," Violet observed. "Do you really think we'll have time for all three of us to battle?"

"Sure, I don't see why not," said Orange. Without waiting for an answer, he led the way down the path (which seemed to be made of duct tape and pairs of sunglasses) to a large structure seemingly built entirely out of toothpicks, copper piping, and rubber bands.

"Let me guess- Miliovern Gym?" asked Red.

"Never thought I'd be back here," grinned Orange as he pushed his way through the double doors. Violet and Red followed him.

The interior of the Miliovern Gym was brightly lit. At the other end of the usual dirt battlefield stood a woman who looked slightly older than Orange, with fiery red hair that came down nearly to her waist.

"Orange!" she exclaimed. "Well, well, I didn't expect to see you here. So, you gonna introduce me to your friends?"

"Yep!" Orange stated. "Electra, this is Red Vershunn, and this is Violet Scramble. Vi, Red, this is my cousin, Electra McPixel, Gym Leader of Miliovern City."

"So, I'm guessing you're all here to battle me?" Electra asked, a confident smirk on her face.

"We are," Violet confirmed.

"Alright, but I think I want to battle my little cousin, first," said Electra. "He was always going on about how he'd be the best Pokémon Trainer in McPixel family history, so I'd like to see how he does."

"Let's do it!" Orange exclaimed excitedly as he took his position at the edge of the battlefield, having already taken a Poké Ball off his belt and enlarged it.

Electra stepped forward, taking one of her own Poké Balls. "Three Pokémon each," she stated. "How's that sound?"

"Fine by me!" Orange replied. "Let's go!"

In response, Electra smirked as she threw her Poké Ball. "Voltorb! Go!" she shouted.

In a flash of light, what appeared to be an overgrown Poké Ball with eyes instead of a button materialized on the battlefield. Orange nodded, apparently recognizing the species, but Violet was the one who took out her Pokédex.

"Voltorb, the Ball Pokémon," it droned. "Often found in power plants. It has zapped many people due to its resemblance to a Poké Ball."

Orange heaved his Poké Ball. "Nidoking! Go!" he shouted.

The ball opened up in midair, unleashing the monstrous, purple form of Orange's Nidoking. Electra looked mildly impressed, but not too worried.

"Let's get started!" she declared. "Voltorb, use Swift!"

"Voltorb," droned Voltorb in a monotonous mechanical voice as a barrage of glowing stars flew forth from its body. Nidoking tried to dodge them, but the stars changed course easily and slammed into the Poison/Ground-type.

"That's nothing!" scoffed Orange. "Nidoking! Quick Attack!"

Nidoking roared as it speedily dashed at Voltorb, slamming the Ball Pokémon backwards before Electra had any time to react.

"Voltorb, Rage attack!" she shouted.

"Voltorb, Voltorb," Voltorb droned menacingly, its eyes seeming to show more and more anger as its entire body started shaking. Within seconds, Voltorb sped forwards, and rolled into Nidoking.

"Rolling Kick now!" Orange ordered.

Nidoking roared again as it expertly delivered a roundhouse kick, sending Voltorb flying. As it crashed to the ground, though, Voltorb only seemed to be even more angry than before, and without waiting for orders, it slammed into Nidoking again, this time with more force.

"Smart move on Orange's part, using Nidoking," Red remarked. "Electric moves won't work on it."

"Yeah, but the way this is going, it doesn't seem to matter to Voltorb," Violet frowned as Nidoking blasted Voltorb with Water Gun, only to be met with another blow from the enraged sphere. "When a Pokémon uses Rage, it won't stop the attack until the fight is done, and it gets more powerful with each hit it takes."

"Nidoking! Aurora Beam!" Orange bellowed.

"Rage once more, Voltorb!" Electra ordered.

Voltorb lunged at Nidoking once again, but instead met with a rainbow-colored ray of light fired from Nidoking's horn.

"Vol... torb..." groaned Voltorb as it fought to get through the Ice-type move. Ultimately, Nidoking won out; Voltorb collapsed to the floor and ceased movement.

"All right!" Orange exclaimed as Electra withdrew Voltorb. Violet, however, noticed that Nidoking was breathing rather heavily.

"Orange, you might want to call Nidoking back for now," she advised him. "It's looking pretty tired."

"Huh... good point," conceded Orange as Electra prepared a second Poké Ball.

"Go, Magnemite!" she exclaimed as she threw the ball, unleashing what appeared to be a shiny, silver orb into the air. A single eye was visible on this orb as it hovered in midair. Three screws were inserted into the orb- two below its eye, and one on the very top of the orb. From either side of the orb there was attached a large Ponytashoe magnet.

"Magnemite, the Magnet Pokémon," said Violet's Pokédex. "Uses antigravity to stay suspended. Appears without warning and uses Thunder Wave and similar moves."

"OK, Nidoking, take a rest!" Orange declared as he held out Nidoking's Poké Ball, allowing the red beam to recall the ball's occupant. Once Nidoking had been withdrawn, Orange threw another ball. "I choose you, A!"

In a flash of light, Orange's A materialized. It floated in midair, roughly level with Magnemite.

"An A, pretty impressive, those don't appear very often," Electra observed.

"Not too shabby, huh?" Orange grinned proudly. "Now let's get going so we can beat you already."

"Magnemite, ThunderShock!" ordered Electra.

"A, Transform!" called Orange.

As Magnemite crackled with electricity, A glowed and changed shape, shrinking down slightly. Once the glowing ceased, there now floated two Magnemite on the field. Electra's Magnemite launched a sizzling blast of lightning at A, but in its Transformed state, the Speed Demon Pokémon took the attack with little effect.

"A, use your own ThunderShock!" Orange shouted.

A squeaked loudly as it let off an identical electrical blast. Magnemite, as could be expected, endured the move easily.

"Magnemite, use your Double-Edge!" ordered Electra.

"A, Supersonic!" said Orange.

Magnemite charged forward, but was stopped short as A let off a barrage of visible soundwaves, stopping the Magnet Pokémon where it hovered. After a moment, Magnemite began to float about erratically, its eye not focusing on anything.

"It's confused!" Orange exclaimed. "A, Thunder Wave now!"

A gave a loud squeal as it fired off a jolt of electricity at Magnemite. This time, the electricity continued to crackle all around Magnemite after the attack had ended, and Magnemite found itself floating closer to the floor.

"All right, A, Double-Edge now!" Orange ordered.

"Magnemite, Reflect!" called Electra.

In spite of the confusion and paralysis, Magnemite managed to create a shimmering wall of light in front of it, off which A bounced harmlessly. Around that point, the confusion seemed to wear off, though Magnemite was clearly still paralyzed.

"A, Double-Edge again!" Orange exclaimed.

"Magnemite, Thunderbolt!" ordered Electra.

A charged forward once again, but the real Magnemite let loose a massive bolt of electricity, stopping A in its tracks. Once the attack was finished, A collapsed to the floor, unmoving.

"WHAT?!" Orange exclaimed as A's Transform wore off, the Normal/Normal-type reverting to its usual form. "Rrrgh... A, return now!" he snapped, holding out the Poké Ball. Once A was back in its ball, Orange threw a third Poké Ball. "Let's go, .4!"

The ball split open, unleashing the impossibly hyperactive .4 into the air, where it made two or three laps around the entire battlefield in about two seconds, then floated in front of Orange, practically quivering with excitement.

"Magnemite, Thunderbolt it!" Electra exclaimed.

".4, TM05 now!" Orange ordered.

"Magnemiiiiiite," droned Magnemite as it fired off another Thunderbolt. .4, however, ducked beneath it, then charged towards Magnemite, only to pull off at the last second and vanish into thin air.

"Now use TM28!" Orange shouted.

"EEEEEEEEEEE!" shrieked .4 as the air behind Magnemite exploded, sending the Electric-type crashing to the floor. Seizing its chance, .4, who had reappeared, began flying in circles around Magnemite, letting off multiple minor explosions in rapid succession. Once it was done, it was clear that Magnemite wasn't going to make any more effort to get back up.

"Impressive. Very impressive," nodded Electra as she withdrew Magnemite. "But the fun's just beginning."

"Ohhhh, crap," Orange muttered as a smirk made its way onto Electra's face. "If she's using what I think she's using..."

"Electabuzz, let's go!" shouted Electra as she threw a Poké Ball. Immediately, a human-shaped creature appeared, black stripes covering a large portion of its bright yellow body. Sparks of electricity crackled between the horns on its head, its hands were clenched into fists, and its tail whipped back and forth.

"Ohhhh, crap," repeated Orange as Violet held her Pokédex out.

"Electabuzz, the Electric Pokémon," the machine stated. "Found near power plants, where they feed on electricity. Notorious for causing major power outages."

"Not good, I'm guessing?" said Red.

"Electabuzz is her strongest Pokémon," Orange whispered. "It's nearly unstoppable."

"You can do it, Orange," Violet said encouragingly. "You have more Pokémon still able to battle, and one of them has the type advantage."

"Yeah... yeah, you're right!" Orange exclaimed, his usual grin returning at full force. "OK! .4, use your TM28 attack!"

"Electabuzz, Teleport!" Electra exclaimed.

As .4 gibbered incoherently and blew up, Electabuzz vanished into thin air, only to reappear several yards off to the left, well out of the way of the attack.

".4, again!" Orange ordered.

"Electabuzz, Mega Punch!" yelled Electra.

Electabuzz growled loudly as it slammed its fist into the oncoming .4, sending it flying backwards. The attack seemed to have little effect, however, for .4 came right back and exploded in Electabuzz's face.

"Yes!" Orange exclaimed. However, as the dust settled, Electabuzz could be seen, more or less unscathed, hiding behind a shimmering wall of light.

"Light Screen?!" Orange whined. "OH, COME ON! .4, let's end this! TM09!"

.4 trilled loudly as it rose high into the air and caught fire. Then it dove down towards Electabuzz, and a violent explosion ensued. Electabuzz had dove out of the attack's path, but wound up caught up in the blast anyway. Unfortunately, while Electabuzz was able to get back up, .4 was not so fortunate.

".4, return!" he shouted as he held .4's ball in one hand and threw another one with his other hand. "Nidoking, go!"

In a flash of light, Nidoking was back out onto the battlefield. It roared loudly, stomped the battlefield, and glared across the battlefield at its foe, who glared right back.

"Let's end this here and now!" Orange exclaimed. "Nidoking, Quick Attack!"

"Electabuzz, use your own Quick Attack!" Electra shouted.

Both Nidoking and Electabuzz tore across the battlefield, colliding at high speeds, bouncing off each other. As they slowly got back up, Electra grinned evilly.

"Let's end this here and now," she said, mockingly repeating Orange's earlier words. "Electabuzz... Psychic."

Electabuzz's body took on a blue aura, and a blast of blue light came off of it, striking Nidoking, seeming to hurt it a lot. When the light faded, Nidoking collapsed to the floor and did not move.

"Wha... wha..." Orange stammered as the reality of what just happened started to sink in. Though Nidoking was now feebly stirring, it was clearly in no fit shape to battle any further.

"Not a bad match, cousin," said Electra as she withdrew Electabuzz. "But what say you toughen your Pokemon up a little more, hmm? I'd love to take on your friends, only this is around the time I close up the Gym for the night."

"I told you we wouldn't have time for all three of us," said Violet. Orange didn't answer, still seemingly stunned at the battle's outcome as he withdrew Nidoking.

"Orange, you should listen to your girlfriend there," said Electra.

"My WHAT?!" Orange exclaimed, seeming to snap out of it. "What- you think she- and I- WHAT?!?!"

Electra giggled, pleased at this reaction. "Well, I think you better get going to the Pokémon Center. Great seeing you again, Orange."

"Yeah, yeah," Orange grumbled as he led the way out of the Gym. Though he had clearly snapped out of his funk, the look in his eyes betrayed the fact that he was still unable to believe that he had actually lost.

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End of Chapter 16.

Zibdas
19th September 2012, 3:12 AM
Whoa... Orange apparently doesn't handle losing well.
...or people talking about him and bugs, apparently.

3D992
19th September 2012, 7:43 AM
Haha ha ha lol... the annoying orange.

jeffdavid102
20th September 2012, 3:04 AM
Smirk. Take dat Orange. Now your cousin can call your mom and tell her just how badly you suck. By the way, is there going to be an AoA chapter soon

Knightfall
20th September 2012, 3:39 AM
I have to wonder what exactly happened to Orange to make him so afraid of Bug types.
I predict Caterpie were involved as was a whole lot of String Shot silk. Ah, the possible psycological trama.

Anyways, I pity Orange slightly, but everyone has to lose eventually. Hopefully Red and Violet have a better time at the gym.

Interesting how you had Violet and Orange become friends, now we have a reason for some of Orange's hostility towards Team Error.

Well, that's all the time I have, great chapter as usual.

Knightfall signing off... ;005;

Missingno. Master
20th September 2012, 3:15 PM
Whoa... Orange apparently doesn't handle losing well.
...or people talking about him and bugs, apparently.
He handles losing in general well enough, but losing specifically to Electra was pretty hard on him. More on this to come in the next chapter.


Smirk. Take dat Orange. Now your cousin can call your mom and tell her just how badly you suck.
Electra won't do that. She's a little hard on him, but not cruel.


By the way, is there going to be an AoA chapter soon
Afraid not. Any spare time I've had the motivation to devote to fanfic writing has been going to 404 Error lately. I just might be done with the Adventure of Adventureness. Haven't decided on that for certain, though. When I do make a decision on that, I'll post in that thread.


I have to wonder what exactly happened to Orange to make him so afraid of Bug types.
I predict Caterpie were involved as was a whole lot of String Shot silk. Ah, the possible psycological trama.
It'll be revealed a little later in the story, but I can tell you that Caterpie are surprisingly not involved.


Anyways, I pity Orange slightly, but everyone has to lose eventually. Hopefully Red and Violet have a better time at the gym.
They'll have a tough time with Electabuzz, for sure. Think along the lines of the reputation Lt. Surge's Raichu had in the anime.


Interesting how you had Violet and Orange become friends, now we have a reason for some of Orange's hostility towards Team Error.
Yeah, I think I did a decent job establishing how they met.


Well, that's all the time I have, great chapter as usual.

Knightfall signing off... ;005;
Glad you like it!

rangernumber-x
22nd September 2012, 1:00 PM
And finally, a review. That isn't a review. More like a bunch of quotes. But still, here it is.

"Whirlwind now!" Red commanded.

Spearow started flapping its wings, but Doduo cawed loudly, and large amounts of wind were expelled from their beaks, blowing Spearow back. As the Tiny Bird Pokémon struggled to stay steady in the turbulent wind, it started to glow and change shape!For some reason, I though whenever Doduo let loose wind like that or used fly, it would make a helicopter of of it's heads/necks.

"Oh, I handled it fine," Orange said dismissively.

"Uh huh," Violet smirked. "I seem to recall you ordering your mother's pet Pikachu to blow them all back to Miliovern with ThunderShock." Team Mcpixel are blasting off agaaaaaiiinn...

"Oh yeah?"

"Yeah!"

"Oh yeah?!"

"Yeah!"

"OH YEAH?!"

"Orange?"

"Yeah?"

"Shut up."Which raises the question: how many times has this happened since then? And will it ever get old? I think not.

"Well, when he was six-" she began.

"VIOLET! I SWEAR TO MEW, IF YOU TELL HIM-!" Orange exclaimed suddenly, despite him being a good distance in front of Violet and Red, and thus seemingly out of earshot.
Well, that escalated quickly.

Without waiting for an answer, he led the way down the path (which seemed to be made of duct tape and pairs of sunglasses) to a large structure seemingly built entirely out of toothpicks, copper piping, and rubber bands.
First, is it the best idea to have copper walls on a electric type gym? And second, duct tape. Always use duct tape.

In a flash of light, what appeared to be an overgrown Poké Ball with eyes instead of a button materialized on the battlefield. Orange nodded, apparently recognizing the species, but Violet was the one who took out her Pokédex.One thing I've wondered: If Voltorbs are so much bigger than regular pokeballs, then why are they mistaken so much for those item balls in games?

"Electabuzz, Teleport!" Electra exclaimed.Can it actually learn that?

"I told you we wouldn't have time for all three of us," said Violet. Orange didn't answer, still seemingly stunned at the battle's outcome as he withdrew Nidoking.Hey, Orange. You see that bridge over there, the one made out of Light bulbs, AA batteries, magazine clippings and duct tape? Well, GET OVER IT.

Alright, great chapter. Great for plot development, character development, and *insert random development...HERE*. Bye!

Jonah the Slaking
23rd September 2012, 3:50 AM
So yeah, I'm late. Deal with it!

No big surprise, Orange losing. Not because Orange is bad, but because of the fact that his cousin wouldn't be a Gym Leader if she didn't know what she was doing.

Anyone else think of Nidoking as a hulking monstrosity whose steps shake the very earth beneath it? Because I think of Nidoking as a hulking monstrosity whose steps shake the very earth beneath it.

You have a way of torturing us, don't you? First the narrator's name, now Orange's fear of bugs. Oh, and I hereby christen the Red OrangexViolet.

Darkened_Kingdra
23rd September 2012, 7:45 PM
*removes Counter/Mirror Coat shield* Whew! Yep its me , Grav, still alive and kicking. Now on to the review.
Great chapter as always. I like having Orange lose once in a while especially to his cousin. PM list addition, please…Oh God, take cover!!
*boom*

Missingno. Master
25th September 2012, 5:45 AM
For some reason, I though whenever Doduo let loose wind like that or used fly, it would make a helicopter of of it's heads/necks.
I actually portrayed Doduo's Whirlwind like in the manga here.


Which raises the question: how many times has this happened since then? And will it ever get old? I think not.
1: Too many to count. 2: I highly doubt it'll ever get old.


Well, that escalated quickly.
Why, yes. Yes, it did.


First, is it the best idea to have copper walls on a electric type gym? And second, duct tape. Always use duct tape.
1: Not so much, but it's only the outside parts that are made of copper, the inside is practically normal, as with most other buildings we've seen thus far. 2: Yes. Just... yes.


One thing I've wondered: If Voltorbs are so much bigger than regular pokeballs, then why are they mistaken so much for those item balls in games?
My theory is that they can grow and shrink to a certain degree, not unlike how Poke Balls can be shrunk to fit easily on one's belt. Makes sense, given how they're heavily implied to be Poke Balls brought to life.


Can it actually learn that?
There was a TM for Teleport back in RBY, and yes, Electabuzz was compatible with it.


Alright, great chapter. Great for plot development, character development, and *insert random development...HERE*. Bye!
Glad you liked it!


So yeah, I'm late. Deal with it!
Consider it dealt with.


No big surprise, Orange losing. Not because Orange is bad, but because of the fact that his cousin wouldn't be a Gym Leader if she didn't know what she was doing.
True. Very true.


Anyone else think of Nidoking as a hulking monstrosity whose steps shake the very earth beneath it? Because I think of Nidoking as a hulking monstrosity whose steps shake the very earth beneath it.
And yet, they're only four foot seven. Makes no sense to me, personally, they look like the sort of thing that ought to tower over you.


You have a way of torturing us, don't you? First the narrator's name, now Orange's fear of bugs. Oh, and I hereby christen the Red OrangexViolet.
Now don't compare the origin of Orange's fear of bugs to the narrator's name. There's a difference. While I will reveal why Orange fears bugs later on in the story, I'm carrying the secret of the narrator's name to the grave.


*removes Counter/Mirror Coat shield* Whew! Yep its me , Grav, still alive and kicking. Now on to the review.
Great chapter as always. I like having Orange lose once in a while especially to his cousin. PM list addition, please…Oh God, take cover!!
*boom*
Glad you liked it, and consider yourself added!

I've been busy with school stuff lately, so I haven't had much time to write. Rest assured, though, I will be working on the chapter this week. It's been kinda hectic around here, though, so no guarantees as to when the next chapter can be expected. I can't even promise any sort of reasonable estimate. But it will be done, you can rely on that much. I'll try and get it done by the end of the month, but no promises.

jb5000
26th September 2012, 2:23 AM
Missingno. Master This Fan Fic Is UBER AWESOME EPIC!!! Please Add Me On The Pm List, By The Way On The 28th Its My Birthday :D I Love It Especially Because Its Based Upon A Glitch Region, P.S Will there be a Anti-Glitch City Where No Glitch Pokemon Appear That Would Be EPIC!!!
~ JB5000

Darkened_Kingdra
5th October 2012, 1:16 AM
Thanks for the PM list addition. I also read The Advawepicdom of Advawepicdomness (stand for every single title ) and because that thread is closed :
A. W. E. S. O. M.E
THAT is the perfect demonstrstion of a blatant fourwall violation.

Grav out.
§

Missingno. Master
12th October 2012, 1:48 AM
Thanks for the PM list addition. I also read The Advawepicdom of Advawepicdomness (stand for every single title ) and because that thread is closed :
A. W. E. S. O. M.E
THAT is the perfect demonstrstion of a blatant fourwall violation.

Grav out.
§

Nice abbreviation. And that thread isn't closed, you know. It better not be closed yet, I still have one final chapter to post in there!

Next chapter might be a while. It certainly won't be until after the final Adventure of Adventureness special chapter, and that's slow going at the moment, between schoolwork and Black 2. I certainly hope I can get to a certain point in this by Halloween. I have something in mind for the Halloween chapter, but it relies on things moving along.

Moonlight Amaryllis
12th October 2012, 3:58 AM
Hau-au-au, I'm so sorry about my sudden disappearance. This review will be brief.

The latest chapters have been interesting, to say the least. The bringing back of Jimmy, meeting this dimension's "Bill", the flashbacks, and the many battles along the way. Not to mention the scenes between Violet and Orange. They are notorious for making me laugh myself to tears.

Certain places felt rushed, however. The evolutions were like, "WOAH WOAH WHAT?!"; they were just so out of place to me. I'm not sure if its just me or what, though.

I'm very interested about what will happen next! MaybesomemoarViolet/Orange

See you next chapter~

ESPNfanatic35
13th October 2012, 4:19 PM
Omg I'm so sorry for the late review. Another great, hilarious chapter! My favorite part was the flashback on how Orange and Violet meet. Even though they get annoyed at each other, they have great chemistry with one another!



"Oh yeah?"

"Yeah!"

"Oh yeah?!"

"Yeah!"

"OH YEAH?!"

"Orange?"

"Yeah?"

"Shut up."

A somewhat lengthy silence followed this. After about a minute of watching the feebly stirring Team Error grunts, Orange spoke up again.

"So, wanna play?"

"OK."

Oh my gosh, this could not be a more accurate representation of the interactions of five year olds! Freaking hilarious!

Missingno. Master
25th October 2012, 10:19 PM
Hau-au-au, I'm so sorry about my sudden disappearance. This review will be brief.
Not a problem, I've been kinda absent from this myself these past couple of weeks.


The latest chapters have been interesting, to say the least. The bringing back of Jimmy, meeting this dimension's "Bill", the flashbacks, and the many battles along the way. Not to mention the scenes between Violet and Orange. They are notorious for making me laugh myself to tears.
I'm glad you like them. I always enjoy writing the scenes between Orange and Violet, so I'm really glad those go over well.


Certain places felt rushed, however. The evolutions were like, "WOAH WOAH WHAT?!"; they were just so out of place to me. I'm not sure if its just me or what, though.
I feel it's a good idea to keep the Pokemon evolutions a little spontaneous like that. Don't want things to be too predictable.


I'm very interested about what will happen next! MaybesomemoarViolet/Orange
Well, you'll see soon enough. :)


See you next chapter~
I look forward to it.


Omg I'm so sorry for the late review. Another great, hilarious chapter! My favorite part was the flashback on how Orange and Violet meet. Even though they get annoyed at each other, they have great chemistry with one another!
It's OK, I always say it's never too late to review a chapter. I'm glad you liked the chapter!


Oh my gosh, this could not be a more accurate representation of the interactions of five year olds! Freaking hilarious!
Thanks!

I'm working on the next chapter right now. Haven't been moving quite as fast with the final chapter of The Adventure of Adventureness as I'd have liked to do, and like I said before, I have something in mind for the Halloween chapter, but that requires me to be moving things along here. So, you just might be seeing a new chapter by this weekend. Maybe sooner, but I can't guarantee anything there.

Oh, and if anyone on the PM list is getting a name change, please let me know so I can make the changes on the PM list when the time comes.

Darkened_Kingdra
26th October 2012, 12:18 AM
Omg. I am sorry. That thread is still open.

Missingno. Master
26th October 2012, 2:14 AM
Chapter 17: Battle Aboard The S.S. Nean
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"I lost."

"Orange-"

"I lost."

"Orange, will you-"

"I lost."

"OK, Orange-"

"I lost."

"Orange-"

"I lost."

"ORANGE!" Violet shouted. This snapped Orange out of it.

The trio was back in the Miliovern Pokémon Center, in the room they had been given for the night. Orange hadn't touched much of his food back at dinner (in spite of Violet having ordered fried nines for him), and now he would only sit on his bed and stare off into space, seemingly incapable of processing the fact that he lost a Pokémon battle.

"OK. We get it, Orange. You lost," Violet said impatiently. "Every trainer loses a battle at some time. Heck, you lost to me back in Ivadirin City, remember?"

"That was different," Orange sighed. "That was just a practice battle to toughen up .4 and Chompy. They were both brand new, .4 was freshly caught, and you had just gotten Chompy, so the trainers' skills didn't come into play as much as in a real Gym battle. Not only that, Electra never really thought I'd be any good as a trainer. I just... I wanted to prove her wrong."

"Well, look," said Red, "Tomorrow we'll be on the S.S. Nean, at a party with tons of other trainers, we can toughen up our Pokémon there, and then you can battle her again, OK?"

"Yeah... I guess so," Orange sighed. Violet glanced at him, a hint of concern showing on her face in place of her usual glare.

Not long after this, the trio went off to sleep. Or at least, it seemed that way; had Red not put in his earplugs (which was starting to become a habit now with him), he might have noticed a distinct lack of earsplitting snoring.

Next morning, Red woke up and removed his earplugs to find Orange's snoring in full force. He was about to hit Orange over the head with his pillow, but Violet woke up at that moment and beat him to it.

"Zzzzz-mmph! Gah! Wha?!" Orange spluttered as he leapt out of his bed, awoken by Violet's pillow. "Oh, come on, Vi, what was that for?"

"Good morning to you, too," Violet yawned as she removed her earplugs. "C'mon, get dressed, you two, we want to get in as much time on the S.S. Nean as we can before tonight, right?"

"Right!" Red declared.

"Yeah, right, sure," Orange nodded, though without his heart in it.
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Once they were all dressed and had eaten their breakfast (Orange had his usual fried nines, and this time ate quite a bit more than he had the night before; Violet had a glass of eight juice; Red had several slices of zero toast with a small side of fried nines), the trio left the Pokémon Center and set off towards the docks, following the nurse's directions. Orange had adamantly refused to ask for directions, insisting that he knew Miliovern City like the back of his own hand; Violet asked the nurse for directions anyway, which turned out to be a wise move, for she had to correct Orange on three different occasions. Orange, however, didn't seem to be in too much of an argumentative mood today, and even neglected to step around a freeze arch; Red and Violet had to pull him free.

"Thanks," he mumbled.

"Oh, for Mew's sake, snap out of it already!" Violet exclaimed suddenly. Red wheeled around to watch this, taken completely aback by this. "Will you stop moping around, Orange? You're driving us crazy! OK, you lost against your cousin- big deal! If anything, that should motivate you to train harder! You think moping around feeling sorry for yourself is gonna help you beat her? Now you get on that ship and you wipe out every last trainer on board, and then you march right back into that Gym and you take out every single Pokémon that cousin of yours throws at you!!"

Orange was visibly startled by Violet's sudden outburst, and for a moment, didn't speak. Once he found his voice, he said, "OK, you know what, Vi? For once in your life, you're right. What am I doing, moping around like this, anyway? Yeah! You know something? I'll do it. I'll go and take out every single Pokémon belonging to every single trainer on board that ship, and then I'll go back into Miliovern Gym and I'll beat Electra's team so badly they won't know what hit them! Come on, guys, let's do this!" With that, Orange ran off in the direction of the docks, with Violet and Red following behind.

"You sure that was wise?" Red asked Violet. "He's even more worked up than usual, and that's saying something."

"I still prefer it to when he was all mopey," replied Violet.

"Good point," Red conceded. "C'mon, Violet, we should probably try and catch up, otherwise there won't be any trainers left for us to fight by the time we get there."

"Right," grinned Violet as they started to jog after Orange.

For the next five minutes, the trio raced along the streets of Miliovern (Red and Violet caught up to Orange fairly quickly), until they reached a street which stretched along the coastline. Numerous docks seemingly crafted out of Styrofoam, threes, empty soup cans, and a large assortment of Nintendo Game Boy Colors lined this street, with various forms of aquatic transportation moored at these docks. Red spotted what appeared to be a submarine made entirely out of duct tape, and a small motorboat made out of TV remote controls and leaves. What they were looking for, however, they spotted within seconds- a massive structure, floating on the water, with a hull made primarily out of pine cones and white toilet seats, the words "S.S. Nean" painted near the bow in large, black letters. A man in a sailor's uniform stood next to a gangplank which seemed to consist entirely of aluminum siding, pieces of fence, and chunks of rock.

"Tickets, please," he said in a bored voice. Orange dug his ticket out of his pocket and showed it to the man. Red pulled his ticket out of his backpack, and Violet produced her ticket from her fanny pack. "Alright, welcome aboard," said the man, stepping aside to let them pass.

The trio walked up the gangplank and found themselves on the ship's deck, the floor of which looked like it was made up of chunks of concrete and rocks. The muffled sound of commotion could be heard from behind a door right in front of them, which seemed to lead to an indoor portion of the ship. Orange walked up to the plastic door and yanked it open, and was greeted with a loud rush of cheering. Leading the way inside, Orange pushed through a sizable crowd, and found himself looking at what the crowd had gathered to see- a Pokémon battle was well underway. Red and Violet caught up to Orange and watched the fight unfold along with him- on one side, there stood a short, vaguely human-like Pokémon with a yellow body (the bottom half a darker shade than the top), and on the other side, a furry, brown rodent that everyone present recognized as a Raticate. Violet took out her Pokédex and pointed it at the Raticate's opponent.

"Drowzee, the Hypnosis Pokémon," droned the device. "Employs hypnotic powers to put its enemies to sleep before eating their dreams. Drowzee can get sick from eating bad dreams."

"Let's go, Drowzee!" exclaimed its trainer. "Seismic Toss!"

"Raticate, a Jump Kick!" commanded the opposing, and extravagantly overdressed trainer (he was wearing, in addition to his suit and bow tie, a pair of fancy glasses and a top hat).

"Jump Kick?" repeated Orange in a confused whisper. "I didn't think Raticate could learn that..."

"Rrrrraticate!" snarled Raticate as it lunged forward, slamming its foot into the oncoming Drowzee, causing it to stumble backwards.

"Drow!" gasped Drowzee in an eerie tone which somehow seemed to echo. Drowzee fell to the floor, but got up almost immediately.

"Don't give in, Drowzee! Use Mega Punch!" yelled the Drowzee's trainer.

"Raticate, Super Fang attack!" said the Raticate's trainer.

"Drow... zee!" Drowzee exclaimed as it slammed its right fist into Raticate's side. Though the attack clearly hit hard, Raticate recovered quickly and sank its prominent front teeth into Drowzee's right arm, causing the Psychic-type to howl in pain.

"All right, Quick Attack now!" the trainer exclaimed.

"Rrrrraticate!" screeched Raticate as it released its dental grip on the Drowzee's arm, backed up a bit, and slammed into it with incredible speed. Neither Drowzee nor its trainer had any time to react to this as the former fell to the floor, unconscious.

"And that's win number ten for my Raticate," the overdressed man declared proudly as the Normal-type walked over and stood near his feet, glancing at various members of the crowd, as if daring any of them to try and take it on. "Do we got any other challengers, or should we just call it a day?"

"Oh, you got yourself another challenger, all right!" Orange exclaimed as he pushed his way out of the crowd, finding himself within the wide circle everyone was forming around the two trainers.

"Mm-hmm!" nodded the man, grinning at the young trainer. "And you think you got what it takes to beat my Raticate here?"

"You better believe I do," said Orange as he took a Poké Ball off his belt and enlarged it. "Ready to go?"

"Always," the man stated. "We accept your challenge! Raticate, go!"

"Raticate!" exclaimed Raticate as it stepped forward.

Orange threw the ball into the air. ".4, I choose you! Go!" he shouted as the ball split open, unleashing the small, purple Pokémaniac-type in a flash of bright light. Upon being let out, .4 zipped around in small circles, gibbering unintelligibly out of sheer excitement.

"Raticate, Hyper Fang attack!" the man ordered.

".4, TM28 attack!" called Orange.

As Raticate lunged forward, front teeth bared and ready, .4 flew down to meet it, and promptly let loose a minor explosion, sending Raticate flying backwards and crashing to the floor. Raticate, however, got up almost immediately afterwards, still ready to go.

"Not bad!" the man declared. "Now, Raticate, a Jump Kick!"

"Rrrrrraticaaate!" screeched Raticate as it leapt up again, this time aiming a kick at .4.

"Use TM05 now!" said Orange.

.4 zipped forward once more, streaking right at Raticate, but pulled out of it at the last second and vanished into thin air. A surprised and confused Raticate fell to the floor and slowly climbed back to its feet, wincing in pain.

"Cool," grinned Violet. "Raticate kept going and crashed!"

"Finish it with Wing Attack!" Orange yelled.

"Stop!" the other trainer exclaimed suddenly as he walked up and scooped his Raticate into his arms. "Your .4's proven how tough it is. What say we call it a draw?"

"Hey, come on, I was winning!" Orange argued, but the man didn't seem to hear him. Shrugging this off, Orange glanced around at the numerous trainers still gathered around. "Well, come on, who's next?" he called. Numerous trainers spoke up at once, all of them wanting to challenge Orange, who selected one of them at random. The battle quickly commenced, Orange's .4 against the trainer's 7g. As the two traded blows, Red heard a voice nearby.

"Aw, come on, I wanted to battle!" a nearby trainer was complaining. He looked to be around Red's age, with short, spiky black hair.

"Hey, if you want to battle, I'm up for a fight," Red offered. The other trainer turned to face Red and grinned.

"You're on!" he declared. "Name's Terrence, who're you?"

"I'm Red," stated Red. "And this is Violet, and the guy with the .4, that's Orange, our friend.

"Nice to meet you, Red," nodded Terrence. "Now let's get going, huh?"

"Fine by me," said Red as they walked over to a less crowded part of the room. Violet followed behind and stood next to Red.

"Two Pokémon each?" asked Red as he took out a Poké Ball.

"Fine by me," replied Terrence as he mimicked this action.

"Doduo, go!" Red called as he launched his ball.

"I choose Sandshrew!" shouted Terrence as he threw his Poké Ball

In identical flashes of light, Red's Doduo appeared, as did a bipedal, yellow-brown Pokémon, its hands tipped with small yet sharp claws.

"Sandshrew, the Mouse Pokémon," said Red's Pokédex. "Sandshrew burrow underground in arid locations and emerge only to hunt for food."

"Doduo, let's win this!" Red exclaimed. "Peck attack now!"

"Do do Doduo!" exclaimed both of Doduo's heads simultaneously as it dashed forward.

"Sandshrew! Scratch attack!" commanded Terrence.

"Shrewwww!" screeched Sandshrew as it curled its body into a spherical shape and rolled forward at a rapid pace. As it approached Doduo, Sandshrew unfurled its body, leapt up, and raked its claws across Doduo's torso, sending the Twin Bird Pokémon tumbling backwards.

"Come on, Doduo!" Red encouraged his Normal/Flying-type. "Fight back with Skull Bash!"

Doduo regained its footing and charged at Sandshrew once more, this time with heads lowered.

"Sandshrew, use your Body Slam!" ordered Terrence.

"Sa-shrew!" Sandshrew replied as it leapt into the air, then landed deliberately and forcefully on Doduo's back, the weight of its whole body forcing Doduo down to the floor. Sandshrew expertly leapt off as Doduo struggled to climb back to its feet.

"Fury Attack!" Red called.

"Sandshrew! Fury Swipes now!" shouted Terrence.

Doduo charged at Sandshrew once more as the Ground-type jumped up, claws bared. An all-out melee ensued as Doduo's heads jabbed at Sandshrew with their beaks, while Sandshrew scratched at the heads repeatedly. The two broke apart, with both of them breathing heavily.

"What now?" Violet muttered to Red.

"I don't know," Red admitted. "That Sandshrew's pretty good against anything I try. Attack power isn't much use when the moves aren't even hitting- Doduo?" Red said, for while he was speaking, Doduo proceeded to charge up what appeared to be a large, glowing triangle between its two heads.

"Wait a second," Violet said, snapping her fingers. "You said 'try' and then 'attack'. Doduo must've thought you meant Tri Attack! It knows Tri Attack!"

"Whoa!" Red exclaimed at this revelation as Doduo fired off the Tri Attack, the large, glowing triangle striking Sandshrew, sending it tumbling backwards. "Way to go, Doduo! Let's finish this right now, use Skull Bash!"

"Get up, Sandshrew! Poison Sting!" exclaimed Terrence. However, it was no good. As Sandshrew struggled to get back onto its feet, Doduo plowed both heads into the Ground-type. Sandshrew flew backwards and slammed into a wall, where it slowly slid down and slumped to the floor, where it lay without any further movement. Scowling, Terrence withdrew his Sandshrew, then took out another Poké Ball.

"Good job, Doduo!" Red exclaimed, grinning widely as Doduo cawed triumphantly.

"Don't get too excited, this battle's just getting started!" declared Terrence as he threw his next Poké Ball. "I choose you!"

In a flash of light, a blue Pokémon of moderate size appeared. It stood on four legs, and small barbs were visible on various points all over its body, including its sizable ears.

"Nidorina, the Poison Pin Pokémon, and the evolved form of the female Nidoran," droned Violet's Pokédex. "Though usually docile, Nidorina will attack with bites and scratches when provoked. Its horns develop slower than Nidorino's, so it prefers attacks involving its claws and teeth."

"Doduo, you still good to go?" asked Red. Doduo gave a pair of affirmative caws, and stared down at Nidorina, who stared right back at the two heads. "OK! Doduo, Tri Attack now!" Red ordered.

"Do do!" cawed Doduo as it charged up and launched a great, glowing triangle from between its two heads.

"Nidorina, Tackle attack!" ordered Terrence.

Nidorina deftly evaded the Tri Attack, then charged forward, slamming into Doduo's spherical torso, sending it stumbling backwards.

"Now finish it with Thunderbolt!" yelled Terrence.

"Riii...naaaaa!" screeched Nidorina as she unleashed a sizzling blast of electricity. Doduo screeched and cawed in pain as the electricity lit up its entire body, then crumpled in a heap as the attack ended.

"Doduo, return now!" Red said as he held out Doduo's Poké Ball in his left hand. Once Doduo was back in its ball, Red threw another Poké Ball with his right hand. "Charmeleon, come on out!" he added.

In a flash of light, Red's Charmeleon materialized. It stomped the floor, snorted, and glared at Nidorina menacingly. Nidorina met Charmeleon's gaze unflinchingly. Both of them were ready for battle.

"Charmeleon, Flamethrower!" Red ordered.

"Nidorina, Water Gun!" called Terrence.

Simultaneously, Charmeleon unleashed a powerful stream of flames from its mouth, and Nidorina let fly a stream of water from her mouth. The two attacks collided in midair, and a great deal of steam was produced, as fire was extinguished and water evaporated at identical rates. The two were evenly matched, and neither side was giving an inch. This went on for some time, until Nidorina's attack started to weaken. More steam ensued as Charmeleon's Flamethrower started to overpower the Water Gun, and Nidorina was finally hit by the move.

"All right, Charmeleon!" cheered Red. "Now use Scratch and finish it!"

"Char!" replied Charmeleon as it lunged forward and took a swipe at Nidorina with its glowing right claws, sending it flying. Nidorina landed on the floor at Terrence's feet, unconscious.

"Rrrrgh!" Terrence exclaimed as he withdrew Nidorina. "I lost! But this is not the end, Red! We will meet again, we will battle again, and next time, I will win!" With that, he wheeled around and stormed off.

"Wow," Red remarked. "Almost makes Orange seem sane."

"Yeah," agreed Violet. "Oh, by the way, that wasn't Scratch Charmeleon used back there. Did you notice its claws glowing like that? That was Slash."

"Was it really?" Red asked with an air of surprise. "Nice one, Charmeleon!" he exclaimed.

"Charmeleon," replied the Flame Pokémon with a satisfied smirk. As Red withdrew Charmeleon, Orange came walking over to them, a satisfied smirk of his own on his face.

"How'd the battle go?" asked Violet.

"Battles, not battle!" Orange grinned. "It was awesome! I must have battled 10 or 12 trainers back there and I beat them all! .4 and Fearow are totally wiped, but they were so great!"

"How did you manage that many battles?" asked Red. "I only got in one just now, and it wasn't that long."

"I'm that good, I guess," shrugged Orange. "Did you win?"

"Yep," replied Red. "The guy was a bit of a sore loser, though."

"Man, I hate that," said Orange, shaking his head. Red and Violet exchanged exasperated looks at this.
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Hours passed. Red, Orange, and Violet took to challenging any trainer who happened to pass them by. Red and Parasect came out on top against a young girl and her 44Hy; Violet made great use of Skulls's Mimic attack against a middle-aged man's Poliwag, turning its own Hypnosis against it; Orange and A narrowly came out on top after a fierce bout with a teenage boy and his Magmar. After dozens of battles, all their Pokémon were completely exhausted, so they decided to go out onto the deck and get some fresh air.

Out on the deck, the sky was getting dark; the pixellated, blocky, scrambled sun was descending in the sky.

"The ship's gonna set sail soon," Orange remarked. "You think we should head back to the Pokémon Cen- whoa!"

For at that moment, the entire ship lurched, as something collided with the hull with great force. Red looked over the side, but pulled his head back swiftly.

"Red, what is it?" asked Violet. Red opened his mouth, when a massive creature emerged from the water, towering over the ship. A very large serpent with blue scales, as well as jagged white scales poking out in place. A pair of beige whiskers were on either side of its gaping mouth, in which four massive, sharp fangs could be seen. Its eyes, perpetually narrowed in an expression of anger, scanned the area before settling on the trio of trainers below it.

"That," Red remarked, pointing up at the Gyarados before them.

"Gyarados, the Atrocious Pokémon, and the evolved form of Magikarp," droned Orange's Pokédex. "Rarely seen in the wild. Huge and vicious, Gyarados can destroy entire cities in a towering rage."

"Not good," said Red, Orange, and Violet simultaneously.

Gyarados backed up slightly. Any hopes that it was about to go back into the water were quickly dashed as it rammed the ship again, rocking it violently, As it rocked from side to side, Violet lost her balance and fell over the side, into the water, in extremely close proximity to the Gyarados.

"Violet!!" Orange exclaimed as he ran over to the railing and looked into the water to see her thrashing about.

"Orange, get away from there!" Red shouted.

"Like hell I will," retorted Orange. Just then, Gyarados seemed to notice Violet trying to stay afloat near it. It lowered its head towards Violet, mouth wide open.

"Oh, crap," Red muttered as he prepared a Poké Ball. Orange, however, was quicker.

"No you don't!" he shouted as he threw an empty Poké Ball at the Gyarados. The Atrocious Pokémon was sucked inside almost immediately, and the ball fell down to the deck. While it was still shaking, Orange scooped up the sphere and heaved it towards the ocean as hard as he could, achieving an impressive distance. Just before the ball hit the water, it exploded into thousands of pieces, and Gyarados re-emerged, only now at a much more favorable distance from the ship.

Wasting no time, Orange threw another Poké Ball into the air, calling out Q. Though the Deep Sea Pokémon was wiped out from its prior battles, it still had sufficient strength to telekinetically haul Violet back on board. Sopping wet, Violet was shivering, not only from the cold, but presumably also due to almost having become a Gyarados's dinner.

"Vi, you OK?" asked Orange as he knelt down to look at Violet. Violet looked at Orange and shakily wrapped him in a hug, not saying anything at the moment. Orange seemed rather startled by this, but made no objection to it. Red, meanwhile, looked out into the distance, where the Gyarados was glaring at the ship. After several tense moments of this, the Gyarados silently turned around and descended back beneath the surface of the water. Red sighed in relief as Orange helped a shaking Violet to her feet.

"Orange... Thanks..." Violet said quietly.
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Half an hour later, the trio found themselves back at the Miliovern City Pokémon Center. Violet had dried off and changed into a fresh set of clothes (how she had managed to fit a change of clothes in her fanny pack, much less keep the contents of said fanny pack completely dry, was beyond Orange and Red's understanding), and they were in the middle of eating dinner.

"Well, I think we all got in some good training today," Red remarked. "Orange, by the way, you were something else back there. I didn't even think of doing what you did, with that Poké Ball."

"Yeah... I guess it was... kinda cool," Violet added reluctantly. Orange stared at her, half grinning.

"It would actually hurt you to give me a compliment with your whole heart!" he stated. "I saved your life back there, Vi, that Gyarados would've eaten you!"

"I would've been fine," Violet said. "I didn't ask to be saved."

"I didn't say you had a choice in the matter," Orange retorted.

Red silently observed this conversation, though his mind was on something else entirely. "Hey... hey, guys," he said.

"Yeah?" said Orange as he and Violet turned to look at Red.

"What, Red?" asked Violet.

"I just thought of something," said Red. "I was thinking back to when Electra was using Electabuzz. I couldn't help but notice something about the way it was battling, and if my hunch is right, I think you just might be able to find a way around it after all, Orange."

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End of Chapter 17.

Moonlight Amaryllis
26th October 2012, 4:01 AM
ASDFGHJ CLIFFHANGER

AND FIRST REVIEW

This was a very, everywhere-at-once chapter. Orange recieves some brilliant character development from Violet--way to go, girl--and regains his ego after his defeat against his cousin. I wish you had emphasized on the way Electra claimed he was no good. I would've felt more emotion if that was the case.

The battle that Orange had against the loser with the Raticate reminded me vaguely of something; I'm certain I've seen a scene like that before. That's incredibly odd. Hm. The scene between Orange and Violet (with the vicious Gyrados) lacked an emotional touch that I would've liked to feel. But I did enjoy the scene all together.

I'm excited about what Red figured out against Electra. I cannot wait until the next chapter!

(BTW, why is there a dock made of GameBoy Colors?)

Missingno. Master
26th October 2012, 4:23 AM
ASDFGHJ CLIFFHANGER
Yeah, I know, I'm evil like that. :D


This was a very, everywhere-at-once chapter. Orange recieves some brilliant character development from Violet--way to go, girl--and regains his ego after his defeat against his cousin. I wish you had emphasized on the way Electra claimed he was no good. I would've felt more emotion if that was the case.
Not a bad point, yeah. Glad you like the chapter, though.


The battle that Orange had against the loser with the Raticate reminded me vaguely of something; I'm certain I've seen a scene like that before. That's incredibly odd. Hm.
Yeah, the Raticate trainer was basically ripped right out of the anime- he appears on the S.S. Anne and battles Ash's Butterfree with his Raticate- complete with unnatural knowledge of Jump Kick. Ash trades Butterfree for Raticate, but regrets it and trades back. I could not resist including him in here like I did in The Adventure of Adventureness. This time, I opted to not have him make a trade offer.


(BTW, why is there a dock made of GameBoy Colors?)
They had one made of GameBoy Pockets, but it broke.

Moonlight Amaryllis
26th October 2012, 4:34 AM
Yeah, the Raticate trainer was basically ripped right out of the anime- he appears on the S.S. Anne and battles Ash's Butterfree with his Raticate- complete with unnatural knowledge of Jump Kick. Ash trades Butterfree for Raticate, but regrets it and trades back. I could not resist including him in here like I did in The Adventure of Adventureness. This time, I opted to not have him make a trade offer.

Good idea, because I would have ragged you for it :D



They had one made of GameBoy Pockets, but it broke.

THE WORLD HAS COME TO THIS.