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GoldenNoctowl77
21st March 2005, 8:59 PM
Well, it seems that after a very rude pruning, the old Search for Knowledge thread has been lost. However, even though I was angered by it, I learned to change it in my favor. I am reposting Search for Knowledge, but with added benefits to my readers.

Let's face it...when I began this fic I wasn't the greatest fic writer. My writing was poor, undeveloped, and there were many plot holes. Because of this, I am releasing the Search for Knowledge: Special Edition so to say. By this I mean that I am going back and either totally rewriting or changing parts of chapters. They will have the same occurences in them, but a lot of them will be more detailed with much more character development and clarity. There will also be new scenes added that were cut out of the chapters. (Think of it as the re-release of the Star Wars series :p).

Now, if you recall from awhile back, I gave you a glimpse of this by releasing the remake of chapter 1. Well, here it is again. This gives new readers a chance to experience the fic the way it was meant to while also giving my old readers new content before I can start with new chapters again. Well, without further ado, here's chapter 1 of Search for Knowledge!


The Search for Knowledge Index of Chapters
Chapter 1: The Beginning of a Legend (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1274447#post1274447)
Chapter 2: What Dreams Are Made Of (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1546313#post1546313)
Chapter 3: A Month Goes By! The Final Test! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1553501#post1553501)
Chapter 4: A New Challenge! The Hoenn League! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1557643#post1557643)
Chapter 5: An Unexpected Challenge! Off to the Archipelago! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1563941#post1563941)
Chapter 6: Taillow Trouble! Last Plunge for the Ferry (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1566880#post1566880)
Chapter 7: The Road to the Hoenn Archipelago! Intentions Revealed! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1570124#post1570124)
Chapter 8: Accused of Cheating! Jeff's Special Seedot! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1575662#post1575662)
Chapter 9: A Touch Battle! Mike's First Gym Fight! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1952177#post1952177)
Chapter 10: Skitty and Delcatty! Feel the Love! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1958557#post1958557)
Chapter 11: Forest of Frights! A Ghoulish Experience! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1963120#post1963120)
Chapter 12: Sandstone City! Amanda's First Contest! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1970503#post1970503)
Chapter 13: Beginner's Luck or a Harsh Defeat? The Final Outcome! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1978622#post1978622)
Chapter 14: Aron's on the Beach! Cave Escapee! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1993217#post1993217)
Chapter 15: Alabor City! Panic in the Harbor! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=1998361#post1998361)
Chapter 16: Mike and Tropius! The Field of Grass Types! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=2026505#post2026505)
Chapter 17: Cinder Town Gym! A Flaming Outcome! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=2039209#post2039209)
Chapter 18: The Problem Solved! Pokemon Fishing! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=3177109#post3177109)
Chapter 19: Carvanha Vs. Camerupt! Cinder Town Rematch! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=3185592#post3185592)
Chapter 20: Reno City Lighthouse! Nuzleaf's Awesome Battle! (http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?p=3236078#post3236078)


Chapter 1: The Beginning of a Legend

"Dad wait up!" A small boy yelled as he tried desperately to keep up with the man that was walking out of the house. The boy leapt out the door and onto the porch as the man tiptoed down some steps carrying an umbrella. Rain was falling hard and the boy's hair began to droop from the drops that struck it. "Daddy!" The boy yelled again. Sadness was evident in his baby blue eyes. The glimmer in his face went away like a star that fades when morning comes.

The man turned back once, looking out at the small boy at the top of the steps. He smiled once and leaned down. "Come here Michael…" He said opening his arms and placing the umbrella down. The rain began to trickle down on him; drenching his overcoat. The boy's eyes felt a sense of delight for that moment and he ran down and into the man's arms.

"Daddy…" He smiled gripping the man's torso tight. His father rubbed the boy's wet hair and then stood up again. The short sense of happiness they felt was diminishing in both their faces now.

"Be a good boy son…" The father said and turned. He placed a small glowing object into his pocket as he did. It was small, but looked like a piece to something bigger; something not of this world. The child then watched as a cab pulled up. His father took one last look at his son and then stepped into the vehicle. It sped off without so much of a glance back by the father.

"Daddy! Come back!" The child said beginning to cry. He rushed off down the street after the car but tripped onto the cement as he did. The door the two exited earlier opened again and a woman came into view; her brown hair blowing in the stormy breeze. She looked around with concern in her hazel eyes; ones that had shed many tears recently. She then noticed her son lying face down on the ground. Quickly, she rushed out into the street to pick him up. She grabbed the boy from the ground as he sobbed and began to cradle him.

"Don't worry…daddy will be back. It will be ok. I won't let anything else happen to you…" She said rocking the child back and forth as he whined and gripped her pink bathrobe in his small hands…

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"And it's four a.m here in Bayside City for all you early birds!" The alarm roared from a small dresser next to a twin bed. Suddenly, a muscular arm came into view smacking the clock and sending it flying across the room. It skidded across the floor and smashed into the wall; leaving a dent in the drywall and a large crack in the plastic of the alarm. The room was small; even smaller because it was covered in clothes.

The alarm's assailant slowly rose from the bed, pushing the covers to his feet and yawning. He then brought his hands to his face and began to rub his squinted blue eyes. "Need more sleepy…" He then said and fell back down into the covers; burying his head into the pillow.

"Michael Anthony Strateri, get your butt up this instant!" He then heard a loud feminine voice call from down the hall.

"All right I'm up!" Mike roared leaning back up and rolling his eyes. "You know, you could let me sleep a little longer. I mean, it's not everyday I don't get home from a party untill 3 a.m!" He roared back down the hall.

"Actually, it happens every Friday!" The woman roared back. Mike could tell she had a smirk on her face just from the tone in her voice. His mother always had a thing for enthusiastic speaking. He slowly moved towards the side of the bed and put his feet off; slipping on some Azumarill slippers. He then began to stretch his arms and yawn again. He placed his hands on his jet black blonde tipped hair and rubbed them back. He then noticed that the room was very dark and decided to go to the light switch to rectify that problem.

"Bah, you would think a mother could turn on a light switch for her son? But no! I have to walk this far to bring light into the room! They should make remotes or some clap on thing." He roared flicking the switch. The room instantly lit up and Mike squinted, rubbing his eyes again.

"What are you complaining about?" He heard his mother yell.

"Nothing, just cranky from waking up this early!" He replied and sat down on the foot of his bed. He grabbed the remote from the bedside and flicked the switch, turning the stations on the television to find something fun on. However, the remote wasn't working properly. Mike kept trying to switch stations but nothing happened.

"What the hell is going on here, I want to watch The Poke-War Chronicles!" He screamed to himself.

"I took the batteries out so you could would focus on the professor‘s introduction!" His mom said peaking into the room.

"You touched my remote? Get out of here before I do something regretful!" Mike roared. His mom sighed and shut the door. Mike thought about getting up to turn the station on the television itself, but he was too tired.

He began to check out what this show was all about. It seemed like some instructor was blabbing about some school or something. "Welcome to the Pokemon Tech TV Station!" The instructor blared. As soon as those words were uttered, Mike remembered why his alarm went off so early. Today was the start of his classes at Pokemon Tech!

"Yes, I get a Pokemon to train with today!" He yelled leaping up and smashing his hand on the fan blade above. "Ow, son of a…" He began, but stopped himself when his mom entered.

"Breakfast in ten. Better get ready. You can't be late for your first day of Pokemon Tech!" She said and shut the door again as a shoe hit it causing a black mark in the wood.

The instructor on the television continued to talk and Mike couldn't help but turn it up. "As most students know from the broacher, each person that begins classes today will be issued a beginner's Pokemon, a Pokedex, and Tech balls. Though each enroller will receive these, they are not allowed to leave school grounds to catch Pokemon at any time. Each student must spend the entire month at the school and get a passing grade. If they do, they will receive a trainer card which will allow them to start their journey collecting badges." The instructor finished his introduction and continued to a nearby table.

The instructor stopped in front of the brown desktop where some spherical Pokeballs were placed. Mike recognized these as Techballs; Pokeballs with a teal top instead of a red one. They were virtually the same, just issued for the school. "There are over 100 species of Pokemon that will be available for first beginners, but there is only one of each type. To assure that our students can handle any type of Pokemon, they will choose their beginner randomly. To demonstrate this, the instructor picked a Tech ball from the table and tossed it. Just before the Pokemon appeared, the screen panned directly to the professor’s face.

“That is all you need to know for now, the rest of the information will be given in your morning classes." The instructor finished his speech and the screen began to flash images of the Pokemon that would be available.

Mike instantly got up and walked to his closet. He noticed the hole he had made in the closet door from punching it the week before. He got a yelling for that, but he was just practicing his strength exercises and didn't see the big deal. He scrounged through his clothes and eventually pulled out a light blue long-sleeved shirt. He then grabbed his newly purchased blue jeans and finally placed a navy blue polo shirt over his light blue one. Mike had spent the whole summer getting in shape for this journey, and he was now more muscle then anything.

After, he walked to the door and into the hall carrying the clothes. He turned his head from the left wall as he slid past a picture. On it was a portrait of his family; his WHOLE family. He never liked to look at it because his dad was on there; known to him only as the deserter. He continued down the hall past his brother's room which was blaring music. Mike liked his brother, but they never really connected. Where Matt was a lazy rebel without a cause, Mike was a helpful perfectionist. As he slipped into the bathroom, he could hear his mother making breakfast. The sound of eggs flipping always made him hungry. He could also smell the fresh scents. She always made a huge breakfast before her sons left the house. Eating right was something Ms. Strateri always preached.

Mike had finished his shower in minutes and slipped on his clothes. He then began to perfect his hair while looking in the mirror. It usually took hours to do it, but he decided to cut that short. After doing the normal bathroom tasks, Mike left and walked into the kitchen. He sat down at the table and watched as his mom set a plate with a large steak and some scrambled eggs down in front of him! "Wow, you went all out." He said grabbing a fork and knife. His mother smiled a bit and then sat down across the table. Mike could see the disgruntlement in her eyes. "What's wrong?" He asked concerned.

"Oh nothing, just waiting for your lazy brother to get up. His first day of Pokemon Tech and he is still sleeping! I don't know what I'm going to do with him!" She laughed and prodded at the eggs she made for herself. Mike's brother Matt was a year older then him, but his mother decided to enroll him when Mike was ready. He didn’t seem to mind much though as the last thing on his mind was going to school. He wasn't that into Pokemon training, but he needed a hobby.

Matt slowly walked out of his room. His dark black hair was whipped and uneven. He wore a brown hoodie with some jeans. Mike couldn't help but laugh at how enthusiastic he seemed. "I decided not to do my hair today; it'll save time!" Matt smirked pulling his hand through his messy black hair. He proceeded to the kitchen table and grabbed his backpack from a chair. "Got to go!" He then said and turned to leave.

"Where do you think you're going?" His mother roared folding her arms.

"My friends are waiting outside so I'll be going there!" He smirked before walking out the door.

"Yeah, I better head off too." Mike replied as he grabbed his backpack and pushed his empty plate forward. His mom took a glance at the food she had for Matt and sighed.

"Be safe!" She told him and sat up. She held her arms out and Mike came forward, giving her the hug she desired. "I will always be here. Call if you need anything...." She said with a small tear growing. Her children had not been far from her their entire lives.

"I'll be fine mom. Don't worry…" Mike said and turned towards the door. He looked back once more before stepping into the nice morning air. Bayside City was just how it was named; a city by a bay. The ocean air whished by relieving Mike. A port city home was perfect, but he needed to get out more. He leapt off the porch and down the sidewalk. As he turned the corner, he noticed Matt and his friends up ahead, but he wasn't about to join them. They were probably not even heading towards the school.

Mike made his way a few blocks down the street and then turned into a nearby driveway. This belonged to his good friend Jeff Flays. Mike skipped up the walkway and onto the porch; placing his fingers on the doorbell. After several rings, Jeff opened the door. His dirty blonde hair was freshly cut and he wore his black and blue sleeved shirt. Mike laughed. Jeff always looked so tall and gimpy, and the fact that he wanted to train dark types was even funnier. Jeff had a light-hearted, energetic, and carefree personality, all of which are not qualities of dark Pokemon.

"You ready?" Mike asked as Jeff stepped out the door.

"No, I still have to redecorate my backpack." Jeff replied rolling his eyes. Mike smiled as his friend joined him on the porch. They then headed back onto the street and continued down the road.

"So what's new in the world of Jeff?" Mike asked trying to make small talk. Jeff had recently been on vacation for a week so they hadn’t talked in some time.

"Not much. Met a few girls, lost a few when they found me annoying. That's how life is though." Jeff replied. Mike began to laugh. His friend was never serious and everything was a joke. The two boys continued down the road some more before reaching their last stop. This was the home of Amanda Belicina, Mike's long time best friend. They knew each other since they were six, and had grown up spending countless days just chilling in each other's houses. She was Mike's pride and joy, the one thing he loved about Bayside City.

She was already waiting on the porch curling her brown highlighted hair with an iron. "Damn curls!" She roared trying to get them out. Mike laughed when he heard her. It was unlike Amanda to swear or get mad, but when it came to personal appearance, she was a monster. Amanda noticed them and jumped up waving. She walked down the walkway and towards them grinning happily. She was a little short, but very pretty. Her purple bandana and matching shirt were on, as it was her "lucky ensemble". She smiled as she approached.

"So, miss me?" She giggled pushing Mike's shoulder back.

"The party was three hours ago." Mike replied smiling. The party was actually Amanda's Pokemon Tech bash. Mike would've remembered that, but it somehow slipped his mind when he woke up.

"What party?" Jeff asked giving Mike a look. Mike instantly became nervous. Amanda and him had decided not to invite him after he showed up with alcohol at Mike's last one dressed like Britney Spears.

"Nothing…me and Amanda had a movie night." He said hoping Jeff would buy it.

"Then what are all those streamers and stuff in the trash over there for?" Jeff asked pointing to the garbage Amanda brought out earlier. Mike closed his eyes knowing Jeff would find out.

"Silly Jeff, you know how much I like streamers even when there are no parties going on." Amanda replied. Jeff shrugged. Mike smiled knowing he had bought it. Jeff wasn’t the brightest of children. The three then returned to the street and headed off to Pokemon Tech.

"I can't wait to get my first Pokemon!" Amanda announced as they headed off.

"As long as it's a dark type, I don't mind!" Jeff added in.

"We'll just have to wait and see." Mike ended with as they approached the front gate of what would be the greatest and most influential month of their lives…..

indigestible_wad
22nd March 2005, 1:45 AM
I can see many similarities with this to your other story, as well as similarities in writing. I can't say it's off to the start like Apocalypse rising did, but it certainly did grab my attention just enough to keep me reading. I hope to read more.

Kiyohime
22nd March 2005, 2:44 AM
Hm. Your writing isn't bad, but I see a lot of trivial errors, mainly where you neglect to place commas in the proper places and the such. Also, it isn't neccessary to capitalize pronouns after quotation marks.

Your description is average at most, and a little plumping up wouldn't hurt. I've never read the first version, so I don't know quite where the plot is leading to, so I will check back when another chapter is posted to see how it develops.

..::Scrap::..

Ladyumbra
22nd March 2005, 2:35 PM
nooooo we are no many months from the dancing pineapple. yeah for jeff

IceKing
22nd March 2005, 8:44 PM
Well for a first time reader it can sound pretty unoriginal, but for the previous readers we know it aint going to be all unoriginal. I thought you made another version of the 1st chapter, and it was alot better than that. Either way the first chapter was alright, but the true funny has not been released yet :) And when it does you can except us to get all spastic

GoldenNoctowl77
23rd March 2005, 4:57 AM
Woah, not getting the feedback I expected, but such is life.

IW- Yeah, chapter 1 doesn't do much to draw the reader in I'll admit. It's pretty much a prologue to introduce the characters. My readers know now though that if they get through the first 10 chapters or so, the fic becomes one of the best and most unique trainer fics around. It focuses on comedy while also having a very serious plot with a lot of character development. Keep reading and reep the rewards :)

Scrap- Thanks for the input. While I like to here about ways to improve, I really don't take small grammatical errors that seriously when reading fics. If there is a lot of spelling errors or very bad grammar, then I can see a reason for it being bad, but things like capitalizing words that begin quotes is something I don't see as very important for a fic. It doesn't hinder the reading in anyway. If this were being published, I would have a different opinion though. As for description, I think I excell in that, especially in later chapters. People on these forums are always stressing description, but in my opinion it is better to have a deep amount without overdoing it. I feel I do just that, and as you'll see in later chapters it does its job well. I'm not for that "The yellow-orange sun peaked over the straight horizon gleaming with vibrant reds and cascading the green grass with a bright hue that made my eyes pool with beads of fresh happy magical special water that made me smile a bright toothy grin." LOL

Lady Umbra- Don't worry, the fic should be caught up to where it was within the next two weeks. You'll get to review the old Pineapple action in the mean time and I might surprise you with new Pineapple scenes in already established chapters :p

IceKing- Nope, this was the remake of the 1st chapter that everyone loved before. I guess releasing it again was a bad idea though as it isn't going off too well. Thanks for your continued support though :)

Well, I'll start posting the Special Edition Chapters more thoughout the following weeks until I am caught up again. I'm beginning to see this as a bad idea though because of the feedback. I got praised when my fic was already established, but going back to the beginning has proven icky. Keep in mind, while I write my fics as a story, I tend to make them more of a script type nature. That is, I use the description and extensive dialogue of a novel, but also minimize EXTREME detail and such to give it a more show-movie feel. I don't feel the need to go all out as I explained above, and I think I accomplish the task well. People always say they can picture everything that I write, and from experience I feel that it is because I use just enough detail to let you imagine the scene yourself while also showing the ropes of what it's like. I don't want to clutter the fic with uneeded words.

Well, I'm done blabbing. I thought I would defend myself while welcoming your criticism. :)

Kiyohime
23rd March 2005, 5:07 AM
XD Good point, so I bow in defeat (for now....fehehehehehe) I haven't seen the later chapters so I'll reserve judgement until I read more of your work.

..::Scrap::..

Lust
23rd March 2005, 5:47 AM
This is the fic that brought me back to being a Pokémon fan in the summer. I was only on Chapter 30 something in the old version. I like the revised edition of the first chapter. I agree with you that it's not really important to have description and all that stuff as long as people can understand your story and picture it. I can't wait for the funny parts!

GoldenNoctowl77
13th June 2005, 7:05 PM
Sorry for the delay, but in truth I have pretty much lost interest in Pokemon. However, I feel that for the fans of my fic, I must bring Search for Knowledge to a close. With that said, I will be releasing the Special Edition Chapters. Only the first few will be completely remade, that's what has taken so long. But after that I will only be revising already written chapters, not completly rewriting them. When I get back to where I was, I will write the new chapters and finish the fic by the end of the summer. I am in no way going to blaze through it and not care anymore though. The fic will still maintain the same quality that I always display. No worries there. Sorry again for the delay, but with graduation and the last month of school, it was very hard to find time. But now it's summer, so I will have chapters galore. Anyways, here is the remake of chapter 2. Enjoy...

Chapter 2: What Dreams are Made Of

A flock of Pidgeys fluttered down onto a sandy path next to a large building. The rain storm that had recently passed the area left beads of rain that pooled on the pathway. The small birds cooed as they fluttered into the puddles; flapping their feathery wings and flinging the water into the air. Suddenly, the Pidgeys began to squawk and fly away from their bath. Three sets of sneakers leapt across the puddle and skidded hard against the dirty road coming to a stop at the main gate of the complex.

“Well, this is it…The Bayside Pokemon Alumni Institute,” Amanda grinned wiping her forehead with her gloved hand.

Mike took a quick glance at her smiling politely and then turned back to the large wooden gate that separated them from their life with Pokemon. The doors began to stir and then slowly opened up allowing the teens a view of a wide park-like environment. Different types of foliage surrounded the cemented area that held a fountain in the middle of a walkway that led to a large complex which was the school. A playground was just to the right and Mike saw many battlefields to the left.

As the three friends began to advance through the gates, they noticed many students running happily around the complex. Several of them were busily studying in a circle under tall oak trees while more argued about who would get the better Pokemon. Mike was forced to halt as three younger students raced in front of him laughing excitedly. Behind them came a purple rodent that Mike recognized a Rattata. Several seconds later a small Pidgey and a mushroom-like Pokemon known as Shroomish waddled after.

"Looks as if some students already received their beginners," Mike noted to the others as they approached the wide set of stairs that lead to the doorway of the school. As soon as the doors were opened, Mike and his friends were greeted to hundreds of students lining up by a set of desks that stretched down the hallway. There was a lot of commotion, but Mike expected this for the first day. The faculty tried to keep order as children ran around and parents gossiped. Jeff shot a look to his right to see a little girl bawling her eyes out. Her hazel eyes were littered with tears that she tried to rub off with her hands. Her mother attempted desperately to soothe her.

"A Caterpie is a great beginner Pokemon!" She said. The girl began to cry harder causing Jeff to wince.

“Maybe the random selection idea isn’t such a nice idea,” Mike said smiling awkwardly.

Amanda and Jeff took their place in line and Mike quickly walked over to join them. As he looked around some more, Amanda began her registration.

“Name?” The brown-haired lady at the front desk inquired.

“Amanda Belicina,” she replied. The lady pulled up a goggle-like machine and placed it to Amanda’s eyes, giving her a small eye and reaction test.

“Everything checks out. Move to the Pokeball selection table please,” the lady requested.

Jeff began to look uneasy. "Crap, Mike I forgot my contacts!"

"Jeff, just take the exam, your eyes can't be that bad if you can see right now!" Mike replied. Jeff sighed and stepped up to the bulky woman.

"Name?" The woman asked just like with Amanda beforehand. She sounded bored and Mike didn't blame her. Dealing with students all day must be tough.

“Jeff Flays,” Jeff replied. The woman’s expression changed from boredom to complete shock.

“You’re the boy who my little Whitney said stole her bra at Bryce’s pool party last week!” She recalled with a loud voice.

“I…I don’t know what you’re talking about ma’am,” Jeff said starting to step back. Mike couldn’t help but laugh. That bra made a fun catapult to launch water balloons at Jeff’s neighbors, that is until it snapped one day and backfired on them.

“I’ll be watching you son. Please read the letters in the lenses of this,” She said sternly while handing Jeff the same contraption she handed Amanda.

"Um, E, H, 4, 676…bra," Jeff began. The woman stared at him blatantly.

"Son, they are all letters…" she replied. Jeff rolled his eyes and pulled away from the machine.

“Well I left my bra…I mean contacts at home!” he yelled. “And what’s with the third degree?”

“I’m just going to speed this up and say you passed. We’re moving to the reaction test. Place your eyes back into the goggles sir,” the woman said growing rather impatient.

Jeff did as told. He waited patiently as the woman played with some buttons. The area around Jeff’s eyes lit up with a white flash but Jeff didn’t react. The woman looked around to her colleagues and then back to the lanky teen.

“Woah!” Jeff yelled around ten second after the flash. He pulled back squinting. “That was bright!”

“He has the reaction time of a Slowpoke…” the lady said out loud placing a hand to her forehead.

“Maria this has gone on long enough! Just let the kid through. I doubt he’ll pass anyways. He’s holding up the line,” the man to the left of the woman requested.

“Move along,” Maria said dispassionately. Jeff smiled and walked towards the right.

Amanda nodded in appreciation to the person that handed her a Pokedex. The small light blue contraption would be the key to understanding the different types of Pokemon. The teen then moved on to another desk that held many slots that each held an aqua blue Pokeball in place.

“Make sure the one you pick up is your gut’s best choice. This Pokemon will be your companion the whole time you are in school.” The blonde lady behind the desk explained.

While waiting in line for his Pokedex, Mike watched her pick one of the Pokeballs. Amanda grabbed the one closest to her.

"Ahh, now let's see what you have there," The instructor enthusiastically said. Amanda threw the Pokeball onto the ground allowing it to go form a slight bounce to an all out roll on the padded floor. In a flash of red light, the ball opened to reveal Amanda's beginner Pokemon.

"Ralts!" The tiny creature cried as it placed its hand on its helmeted head.

"Ahh, great choice miss. Let me record your Pokemon. By the way, it's called Ralts and it's a psychic type!" The woman added in. Amanda stared at it for some time, and then bent down to meet face to face with it. The Pokemon smiled and waddled towards her.

"It's cute!" She said and picked it up. She then pulled out her Pokedex and scanned the little creature.


"Ralts; the feeling Pokemon. Ralts senses the emotions of people using the horns on its head. This Pokemon rarely appears before people. But when it does, it draws closer if it senses that the person has a positive disposition…" The Pokedex uttered.

Mike walked up to her after getting his Pokedex. "Wow, you must have a very positive disposition. Ralts really likes you!" He smiled happily. Amanda nodded.

"Pick your Pokemon Mike! I can't wait to see what you get!" She happily said.

Mike walked up to the table to find many Pokeballs. All of them looked the same, and his choice now determined his best pal for the rest of his life. After scanning for some time, Mike decided to go with the one farthest to the left. He really wanted the right side, but he read somewhere that it's best to go with the opposite direction in times of uncertainty. He picked the Pokeball up and casually threw it down. Like Amanda's, it erupted in a fountain of red after hitting the ground.

There stood Mike's first Pokemon.

"Tttttrike!" it growled happily. The green-haired Pokemon shook its broad head and barked as it opened its eyes. It resembled a small reptilian dog, one in which static constantly ran along its fur.

"Ha, you got Electrike! It's an electric Pokemon!" The instructor commented. Mike leaned down as Electrike sniffed at his heel. He petted the furry back of the cute Pokemon, and then took out his Pokedex.

"Electrike; the lightning Pokemon. Electrike stores electricity in its long body hair. This Pokemon stimulates its leg muscles with electrical charges. These jolts of power give its legs explosive acceleration performance." The Pokedex marked.

"Wow, you got Speedy Gonzalez!" Jeff said as he approached.

"And Amanda, you got…a helmet head!" Jeff laughed.

"Shut up and pick your Pokemon!" Amanda snarled.

Jeff walked towards the desk and clumsily picked a ball. "Here comes my dark type!" He grinned and threw the ball. In an stream of red, a small circle formed.

"dot dot dot!" The Seedot said as it happily leaped up and down. This Pokemon looked exactly like an acorn with eyes and feet.

"Cutey!" Amanda grinned.

"It's pretty cool!" Mike laughed. He then saw Jeff drop the Pokeball; his mouth wide in shock.

"No…dark….type!" were his first words in moments. They were so silent it was hardly audible.

"NO DARK TYPE!" This however, was loud and heard throughout the school. Seedot waddled up to Jeff and rubbed against his leg. It then proceeded to roll around on the ground.

"Keep it down sir! That's a Seedot you got there right? Don't worry; its evolved forms will be part dark. You'll get your dark type eventually!" The instructor informed him. Jeff stared down at the rolling acorn again. He then picked it up.

"So you become a big scary dark type, huh?" He asked it. The Pokemon grinned. Jeff then pulled out his Pokedex to learn more.

" Seedot; the acorn Pokemon. Seedot attaches itself to branches using the top part of its head. It sucks moisture from the tree while hanging off the branch. The more water it drinks, the glossier this Pokemon's body becomes."

"Great, if I give you water, you can become a lamp!" Jeff shouted. The Seedot just happily smiled at him.

"Let's go Jeff; we have to check out our dorm!" Mike shouted. Jeff turned the Seedot upside down and inspected it from all sides.

“I hope we don‘t run into any squirrels on the way,” He said sarcastically.

The three headed down the long twisting hallways with their new Pokemon in hand. Ralts seemed to really enjoy Amanda's company, but stayed clear of Jeff.

"Even Ralts can sense you have a rather negative disposition!" Amanda laughed as the group proceeded forward passing many window-filled walls that gave them a view of the outside complex they saw earlier. They even passed a pizza place in an open area of the hall. Jeff was busily seeing how high Seedot could go. He threw it up into the air and caught it as it descended. Electrike and Mike got off to a good start. The Pokemon was really energetic, and after some time, Mike put it down so it could run off some energy.

The group opened a door that led outside. They had entered a recreational area with tennis courts and other assorted sports arenas. The next part of the dorm hallway was on the other end. It was a beautiful day outside as the sun shone down, so they decided to stop at the picnic tables to the side. Mike looked around a bit as Electrike investigated some nearby bushes.

"Hey Mike, it's your brother!" Amanda pointed to one of the tennis courts. There he was, playing tennis with his friend Kevin. The two were exact opposites in looks. While Matt displayed a body perfect for sport playing, Kevin was a gimpy kid with dirty blonde hair and clothing that always sported punk bands. To the side of Matt was a small blue crocodile known as a Totodile. It slashed as the tennis ball came over the net and sent it back to a Houndour that was also playing.

"Your brother is actually playing doubles with a Pokemon?" Jeff asked. He then added in about how much he liked Houndour.

The three stood up and Mike motioned to Matt. "Get lost! I'm busy!" He stammered and hit the ball back over the net.

"Wow, an idiot as usual!" Amanda replied. Ralts didn't like him either, and it should it by folding its arms. Mike looked down at Electrike, who was chasing a small butterfly around. It saw him and ran up to his feet. Mike picked it up and the three began to head off.

Mike and his brother had never been really close. They were opposites. While Matt was the sport loving, arrogant, and cocky person; Mike was the adventurous, friend loving, and down to Earth one. He wasn’t sure why, but Mike noticed that another thing seemed to keep the two apart; family issues that had been left unsaid. Mike knew there was something out of place, but he never had the heart to ask.

The three teens made it down the hallway to find Dormitory Court 77, the round room to the side that housed their dorms. There were three people to a room, and Mike was shocked to learn that they allowed coed living. Jeff unlocked the leftmost dorm and opened the door. Inside was a small living room with a 13” TV and a couch. To the left was a cramped room with a bunk bed and another room on the right that held a small single person bed.

“I got dibs on the small bed!“ Amanda shouted rushing towards the room.

“I’ll take the bottom bunk then.” Mike stated and saddled his pack.

“Oh no, I’m not taking the top bunk. Remember last time we used bunk beds and I was on top?” Jeff replied folding his arms. Mike remembered back to summer camp; the instance Jeff was referring to. He recalled being woken up every few hours by a crash and finding Jeff lying face down on the floor with the covers of the top bunk spilling over and the wood of the ground splintered slightly.

“Get over it. You get top.” Mike grinned and continued forward. Jeff whined for a few more moments before following.

Electrike, who was waiting just outside the door when the teens walked in, instantly bolted into the room barking curiously. It investigated every nook and cranny before happily sitting down in the middle of the room; its small tongue hanging out as it panted. Seedot rolled inside twisting and turning into Amanda’s room. It smashed against her night stand and blinked a bit.

Amanda kneeled by her bedside and set Ralts on the bed. As she began to unpack her things, the Pokemon leaped off and waddled toward Seedot, its ghostly bottom dragging behind it. The two Pokemon smiled and began to play.

Jeff threw his stuff onto the top bunk and then turned to Mike.

"You guys hungry? I think I'll pick us up a pizza at that pizza place we saw on the way to the dorms."

Mike nodded and turned to see Amanda had entered the room.

“A pizza sounds fine,” Amanda grinned. Jeff walked into the living room and saw his Pokemon leaping about with Ralts. He quickly picked it up; causing Ralts to frown.

“What are you crying about whitey?” He asked before turning and heading out of the dorm. Ralts sulked some more.

"I think he likes Seedot." Mike laughed.

"Probably!" Amanda added. Electrike leaped onto Mike's bed and peered into the suitcase. Mike grabbed his Pokeball clock and placed it on the shelf. Electrike yelped and grabbed a bandana that Mike had inside his pack. It then leapt of the bed and ran around the room. Mike smirked and walked towards the Pokemon. He found it quite hard to keep up with the little Pokemon, and knew he would have the advantage of speed in battle. It was amusing to see it run rings around the room trying to find a path out. It finally leapt towards the door making its grand escape.

“It’s a good strategy maker.” Mike said grinning.

Amanda walked from Mike’s room and found her Pokemon sulking in the corner.

“Oh, Ralts! Did Jeff hurt you?” She asked walking over and consoling her Pokemon. She pulled a purple ball from her pocket and handed it to the Pokemon.

The Pokemon was very emotional, and Mike could tell it was the perfect Pokemon for Amanda.
He then looked down at his and laughed. Electrike was good too, and he knew they would be best friends. A few minutes later, Jeff reentered with the pizza and the six inhabitants enjoyed the cheesy goodness.

There was a knock on the door and Mike answered it to find a student instructor.

“Is this the dorm of Mike Strateri, Amanda Belicina, and Jeff Flays?” He inquired pulling up his glasses with his index finger.

“Yes…” Mike responded. The nerdy teen hoisted up a large amount of school books and shoved them in Mike’s hands.

“These are your class books. Sort them out and attend your introductory class sessions at five.” He instructed. Mike took a glance at the clock on their wall to see it was 4:45.

“Thanks,” he told the teen and shut the door.

After separating their text books, the group left the dorm to get to their classes. Mike was enrolled in the Pokemon League Preparation Class. After all, he was the one collecting the badges, and he needed to know the basics. Amanda was in the Pokemon Contest Class, as it was her grand desire to compete in contests. As for Jeff, he was in Dark Trainer Strategies. He was so set on getting a dark type as his beginner that he signed up for it without thinking.

“Movie after class?” Mike asked as they split in different directions in the hall.

“Sure thing,” Amanda responded and Jeff nodded.

Mike's class was surprisingly interesting. His teacher, Mr. Straglin, was a short man with spiky brown hair and a leading expert in Pokemon battles. His prized battler was a very powerful Hariyama, a sumo-like fighting type with bulbous thighs and huge hands. The professor explained the basics of the class, and informed the students that each trainer would have to pass a battle test with him at the end of the month in order to pass. They didn't necessarily have to win, but must demonstrate that they indeed paid attention and learned how to battle with a right mind.

As for Amanda; her class was a blast as well. Her teacher was a middle aged woman with blonde hair and a thin figure named Ms. Applebee. She was a kind woman and an expert in Pokemon Contests. Her star Pokemon was a Roselia, a pint-sized biped creature with womanly features and roses for hands. Amanda would have to have a contest battle with it at the end of the month. That was the only thing she didn't look forward too.

Jeff got stuck with Mr. Farken, the plump, balding, and irrational man with the big forehead. He was known as the meanest teacher in the school. Jeff was assigned a lot of homework on the first day, and dreaded returning the next. He also had to actually beat Mr. Farken's Crawdaunt, a crustacean Pokemon with huge pincers and a star on its forehead, in order to pass; something he didn't expect to do.

The month was going to be tough, but when it was over, each of them would be able to head off into the world as Pokemon trainers!


Next Chapter- A Month Goes By! The Final Test!
Summary of Mike and co's month at Pokemon Tech and each of their final tests!

DANdotW
13th June 2005, 9:58 PM
Yeah, this is back. I can't wait until we get back to where we were, this story was really great. Not only has it been a great read, but it has been a great inspiration for some of my writing, and for that I thank you.

Back on topic, I'm glad about these chapters, it had improved from what I remember of the old ones. Although, I don't seem to remember them being in school. *Thinks* I probablly just forgot the start, I'm not that good with memory.

HG

IceKing
13th June 2005, 10:28 PM
I must bring Search for Knowledge to a close.

Oh, that sucks. Just wondering, what were you planning on doing for the end of the fic. Was Jeff goign to end up getting eaten by a giant Wailord?

This chapter was wonderful and hilarious especially when Jeff got his test for the PokeDex. I almost forgot Jeff was the inspiration for one of my charachters. Description was good I could easily imagine what every1 and everythign looked like and your style kept me reading to the end as usual. Too bad this fic wont be advancing anymore, but all good thigns must come to an end I suppose.

indigestible_wad
14th June 2005, 12:35 AM
Well, that chapter was interesting. It sort of picked up halfway through. It seems like the story is starting to come along quite nicely. NOt as well as your other stories, but it's starting to speed up.

GoldenNoctowl77
14th June 2005, 4:51 AM
Oh, that sucks. Just wondering, what were you planning on doing for the end of the fic. Was Jeff goign to end up getting eaten by a giant Wailord?

This chapter was wonderful and hilarious especially when Jeff got his test for the PokeDex. I almost forgot Jeff was the inspiration for one of my charachters. Description was good I could easily imagine what every1 and everythign looked like and your style kept me reading to the end as usual. Too bad this fic wont be advancing anymore, but all good thigns must come to an end I suppose.

Actually, if you continued reading you would of read that I am finishing the fic. You will see the end. I don't like Pokemon that much anymore, but I owe it to everyone to write to the end.

GoldenNoctowl77
15th June 2005, 7:32 PM
I had time to write the remake of Chapter 3, so without further ado, here is is :)

Chapter 3: A Month Goes By! The Final Test!

"Electrike, try a quick attack!" Mike shouted as his Pokemon ran full blast at a small blue muscular Pokemon across the field. Static ran down Electrike’s legs as it gained speed. The crested opponent flexed its arm muscles as it prepared for the strike.

"Machop, dodge and use karate chop!" Mike’s opponent, a fellow student named Phil commanded. Machop dove out of the way, curled in a ball and rolling to the side. However, its speed was no where near Electrike‘s.

"Electrike, use spark before it can recover!" Mike followed up. Electrike let out a growl as static bolts surged over its furry body. The hairs on its back stood up and the Pokemon let out a large ball of electricity. Machop broke from its roll and turned to face its opponent, but was hit hard by the attack. The Pokemon let out a cry as its body was filled with electricity that it shouldn’t contain.

“Machop, use endure!” Phil demanded. The Pokemon clenched its fists and opened one eye, glaring at the electrifying Pokemon from across the field. Machop then pulled its hands outward catching the electricity on them and flinging it away. It panted heavily but still looked ready for more.

“Mach punch!” Phil roared. His Pokemon instantly leapt towards its foe. Electrike yelped as its opponent’s hand smashed into its face. The strike was so sudden that even the speedy Electrike could not react in time.

Mike had to think of something else. An electrical strike would just be countered again. He looked around the battlefield. It was one of the many that littered the grounds of the outdoor arena of the school. There were a few oak trees to his left and the rest of his class to the right. If he didn’t come up with a plan, this battle could be over.

“Electrike, quick attack one more time!” He yelled.

“Counter it Machop!” Phil responded, his long black hair falling over his face and his green eyes fixed on the opponent. The two Pokemon ran towards each other; Electrike was faster but Machop held its hands in a cup-like fashion ready to snag the speedy Pokemon.

“Jump!” Mike ordered when Electrike neared Machop. In a burst of static, his Pokemon flung into the air and landed behind Machop. Both Phil and Machop were caught off guard, giving Mike his chance.

“Tackle it!” was the words that came out. Electrike did as ordered, leaping into Machop and pushing it straight in its ribs. Machop let out a gasping cough and fell back. It was dazed and seemed to have got the wind knocked out of it. It a matter of moments, the Pokemon slumped to the ground unable to battle.

"We have our winner!" Mr. Straglin announced jumping up from the sidelines and placing his hands in a y formation. Electrike growled happily, and then turned and leapt into Mike's arms.

"Ha-ha Great job buddy!" Mike laughed petting his electrified friend‘s head. The month was almost over and Mike had learned so much. Electrike had gotten stronger everyday from all the practice battles Mr. Straglin made the class have. Mike was not the best student, but he won a fair share of the matches he had, twelve out of twenty to be exact. Mr. Straglin had said many times before that he admired the boy’s bond with his Pokemon.

It was the day before the last day of class, and tomorrow Mike would have to face his greatest opponent yet, Mr. Straglin and his bulbous Hariyama. It was something he had been looking forward to. Not many students ever had the pleasure of defeating Straglin, but he hoped to be one of the few.

The students returned to their seats as Mr. Straglin began to explain what would take place for the next day.

"Tomorrow you will be taking your final exams. As you all know, the written portion will consist of fifty multiple choice questions on the basics of Pokemon battling. Following this is a one on one match against myself. I will be using Hariyama for everyone, so you may plan accordingly.” At this statement a few of the trainers seemed a bit nervous. Mike knew why, these trainers received beginners that were weak to fighting types, and they didn’t have the confidence to put up a fight against a powerful opponent when at a disadvantage.

“Though I don't expect any of you to win, as only a few students have ever done that, I do expect you to show the skills necessary to become a trainer. It will be a one on one match with no time limit. We will have it outside on the rock battlefield near the west wing of the school. Any questions?” No one spoke up. “Well that's all for today, good luck tomorrow and don‘t be late!" With that, the students stood up from the sandy ground and started towards the complex. Mike recalled Electrike to its Pokeball and followed them as well.

“Nice match! You really put up a fight.” He said as Phil joined him.

“Thanks, you were awesome man. Show me something like that tomorrow with Mr. Straglin!” Phil replied before running to catch up with the others.

“Mr. Strateri, wait a moment.” Mr. Straglin yelled rushing to catch up with his student. Mike enjoyed his conversations with his teacher. The man was only about 12 years his senior and knew how to advise without coming off too superior. In the past month he had really become Mike’s mentor.

“That was some battle you put up there. I can see you are adapting to your situations, molding them to fit your will to win.” The man said smiling.

“Thank you Mr. Straglin.” Mike replied.

“I can see you’re becoming one of the best students I ever had. You share a remarkable bond with your Pokemon and also demonstrate the skills needed to win. I suggest that after you leave this school you head to the Hoenn region. It’s a challenging road but I think you’ll do well.” Straglin explained.

“Thanks for the advise.” Mike remarked. Mr. Straglin placed his hand on Mike’s shoulder and stopped him.

“Just try not to get too overconfident. I’ve seen trainers like you turn their thoughts into delusions of grandeur. You may be gifted, but you’re not unbeatable. The important thing is to give it your all and not give in when you lose, just retry when you’re ready.” with that, Mr. Straglin smiled and walked ahead of Mike.

Amanda was waiting just inside the doorway. Mike saw her beautiful blue eyes through the tinted glass as he walked forward. Her face lit up when she saw him. There was a bond between the two that Mike couldn‘t explain. It was as if no matter how hard times got, they always brightened up when around each other.

"How'd it go?" She asked curiously just as he walked through the door.

"Another win for the Pokemon Master!" Mike laughed juggling Electrike‘s Pokeball in his hand.

"That's awesome!" Amanda replied filled with excitement.

"So where's Jeff?" Mike inquired changing the subject.

"After class studying; Mr. Farken has been working his butt off. There's no way Jeff will beat him tomorrow." Amanda answered.

"My match should be over before his starts tomorrow. I hope I can make it in time to watch it." Mike replied. “Want to head to the park for a little bit? We can take a rest under the trees to relax before cramming in the studying tonight.” he then asked.

“Sure,” Amanda replied following her friend.

The two headed outside the main doors and scuttled down the stairs towards the trees. Students loved this place and saw it as a way to put all their troubles to rest. Amanda laid her back against the bark of an oak tree and smiled as Mike sat Indian style in the shady grass next to her.

“This is relaxing.” she said as if surprised. Mike couldn’t help but stare at her. She was perfect in every way, but it was an attachment that he didn’t know if he should overstep. They had been friends for ages, and Mike knew how hard it was to maintain ties if a break up occurred. He didn’t want to lose her, so he had to hide his feelings.

“Mr. Farkin can go fark himself!” they heard someone scream and turned to see an exhausted Jeff holding Seedot in his hands. He stuck the Pokemon on the branch above them. It swayed a bit, and then happily stayed.

“Why hello Jeffrey!” Amanda giggled trying to sound elderly.

Across the park a small battle was going on between a boy and a girl student. The girl's Bellsprout put up a tough fight using barrages of razor leaves, but it was no match for the other trainer's Numel. The carefree Pokemon launched embers from its hump as the weed Pokemon tried desperately to dodge.

“So, what are you guys planning on doing after we leave Pokemon Tech?” Mike asked fiddling his fingers. He hoped that they would stay together in their travels, but he couldn’t stop them if they decided against it.

“Well I’m planning on becoming a mercenary so I can come back and kill Mr. Farkin.” Jeff remarked with the most serious tone he could.

“What are you doing Mike?” Amanda inquired him.

“Well, I was thinking of heading off to the Hoenn region. It’s the closest one to here and I heard it’s challenging.” he replied.

“Hoenn has the most famous Pokemon Contests in the world. It would be cool if we could travel there together.” Amanda commented not wanting to sound too obvious.

“That would be great.” Mike grinned back and leaned up.

“Hoenn sounds too Japanese for me,” Jeff said standing. “but if you *****es are going there I might as well join you just to liven up the experience.”

“It’s settled then. When we pass…or if we pass,” Mike said turning to Jeff and winking, “we’ll head to the Hoenn region together.” He then placed his hand up in-between the others who grabbed it as a pact.

It was getting late and they knew it was almost time to go. “Well, good luck tomorrow guys.” Mike said. The other two said the same and the group then headed back to their dorm.

*******

Mike yawned as he looked over his textbook at his desk. It was 2:30 in the morning but he wasn’t ready to sleep yet. He wanted to make sure he knew everything, every trick that he could to overpower Mr. Straglin. It wasn’t about the glory of winning, it was about showing his mentor that he had what it takes. He would show Mr. Straglin that Hoenn was about to be dominated…

Mike was already up when Amanda opened her eyes. He was dressed and ready, doing some morning exercises. He and Electrike were practicing attacks and seemed to be doing quite well.

"Sorry I can't watch your battle today Mike." Amanda said tiredly to her friend.

"No problem, you have your contest to worry about!" Mike replied. Amanda stood up and pulled her Pokeball from the night stand nearby. In a flash of red light, she released her Pokemon.

"Ralts!" It cried out and leapt into her arms.

"Ralts and I will do fine." She laughed as she cradled it. Mike gave her a thumbs up then headed out the door. Amanda walked out of her room and headed towards the other. She looked at the top bunk to see Jeff was still sleeping. She laughed to herself, and then snuck up to him. With a quick jerk, Jeff found himself on the floor. Amanda laughed hysterically next to him.

After taking the written portion in the classroom with a junior instructor in charge, Mike made it too the rock field to see Straglin and Hariyama fighting Phil and his Machop. Machop was blown back by a crushing arm thrust that took the tiny muscled Pokemon out in one hit. Mike could now see it was going to be a difficult match. Mr. Straglin motioned to him

"You want to be next Mike?" He grinned. Mike nodded and the two took their sides of the field. Mike threw his Pokeball to reveal Electrike.

"Triiike!" It happily growled.

"Time to see if this class paid off for you!" Mr. Straglin laughed. Mike nodded and looked down at his Pokemon. Static ran along its back and it looked prepped for battle.

The battle began with a charge from Hariyama. "HARI!" It roared as it blundered toward Electrike.

“Electrike, use quick attack!" Mike shouted. The Pokemon ran underneath Hariyama, and then jumped back. It connected with Hariyama's thigh and bounced off.

"Hariyama's big bulk won't be outdone by that Mike!" Mr. Straglin commented. He then ordered a mega punch. Hariyama glared at Electrike and then wound up its arm for the attack. Electrike stood its ground, and then dodged as the hand smashed down where it stood.

"Great job Mike! You're really using Electrike's speed to your advantage!" Mr. Straglin commented. Electrike turned to face Hariyama, who had its back to it.

"Use spark!" Mike yelled. Electrike nodded and released the ball of electricity. It struck Hariyama hard, sending it back a few feet.

"Hariyama, counter with arm thrust!" Mr. Straglin ordered. Hariyama brushed off the attack, and then bounded towards Electrike. Electrike dodged again, but Hariyama did a swinging thrust that hit it hard. It sailed through the air and landed with a hard thud several feet away. Mike looked worried, but Electrike slowly got up. "Hariyama, double edge!" The teacher yelled. Sweat was now dripping down his face. He had rarely been outdone by a student, and he wanted to keep his loss count down.

Hariyama thundered toward Electrike, who let off a massive spark. It struck Hariyama hard but the Pokemon kept lumbering toward the small creature.

“Dodge!” Mike roared over the sound of Hariyama’s feet. Electrike went for the between the legs routine again, but Straglin was ready.

“Sit Hariyama!” He grinned. Hariyama released its feet from the ground and fell down on top of the dodging Electrike.

“There are other ways to attack.” Mr. Straglin grinned. Mike heard his Pokemon yelping from below the bottom of the massive sumo Pokemon. He seemed a bit worried, but that expression changed and he grinned at Straglin.

“I wonder how your Pokemon will take shock therapy to its ***.” he said with a laugh. Electricity began to cackle around the ground under Hariyama. The Pokemon’s eyes widened and it leapt up, sparking furiously. Electrike shook its head and then stood up. Hariyama landed hard on the ground nearby, smashing the rock of the field.

“Impressive. Hariyama rock smash!” Straglin commanded. Hariyama looked at a large boulder nearby and hit it hard with its bulky hand, sending shrapnel of stone towards Electrike. The Pokemon began to dodge, shocking a few of the rocks as it leapt toward Hariyama.

“Quick attack!” Mike ordered. Electrike rammed its head into the body of Hariyama, but only bounced off of the fat. It yelped and landed hard on the ground as Hariyama got to its feet.

“Double edge!” Straglin ordered. Hariyama blundered towards its opponent once more. Electrike was on its feet and sending another spark to counter. The attack collided but Hariyama continued to come. The Pokemon smashed into Electrike and sent it sprawling. It landed hard and this time did not get up. Hariyama breathed heavily and then fell back from the recoil of its own attack. Neither Pokemon moved a muscle.

"It was a draw…" Mr. Straglin whispered. Mike picked up Electrike and congratulated it.

"Nice job buddy…" He said. He didn’t win, but a tie with Mr. Straglin, his mentor and friend, was just as good. Mr. Straglin approached him.

"It was a pleasure battling an opponent like you." he grinned and shook Mike‘s hand. “Who wants to follow that one?” he then asked the class smiling.

*********

Meanwhile, Amanda was in the middle of her Pokemon Contest. After four rounds of showing off attacks in a match against Ms. Applebee's Roselia, she only had one round to go. Ralts was raring for more, and Ms. Applebee herself said it shows off its smartness well. Amanda had used calm mind last turn, and from all her studies she knew what to follow up on.

"Ralts, show them how smart you are with confusion!" She screamed. Ralts let off the attack and it blasted into Roselia.

"Very good Amanda. That was a nice combo move. Calm mind plus confusion scores you extra points!" Ms. Applebee grinned. The match ended. Amanda hugged her smart little Ralts as Ms. Applebee congratulated her.

After her display and passing, Amanda met up with Mike in the hallway.

"I did awesome Mike. It was a wonderful event!" She said hugging him.

"I wish I could've been there to cheer you on. Mr. Straglin and I tied." He replied. Amanda was impressed. The two continued down the hall to the shadow room. Jeff would be sure to be having his match in there.

They stepped in quietly to find Jeff and Mr. Farken had just started their battle on a dark theater-like stage. Seedot rushed in for a tackle, but Crawdaunt just dodged.

"If Jeff looses this he fails." Mike said. Amanda nodded nervously. Seedot recovered quickly and dodged a crab hammer from the giant lobster.

"Seedot, use leech seed!" Jeff yelled. The little acorn closed its eyes and a little seed appeared on its head. The seed launched itself and connected with Crawdaunt. Vines spread around it and sucked a lot of its energy away. Mr. Farken was starting to sweat.

"Crawdaunt, chop the vines off with vice grip!" He ordered. The vines were torn away by the Pokemon‘s massive claws, but Crawdaunt was now breathing heavily.

"Ugh, use crunch Crawdaunt!" The teacher ordered. Crawdaunt lunged for Seedot, but the little Pokemon fell on its side and rolled away.

"Use leech seed again, then bide!" Jeff remarked. Seedot sprayed another seed into the air. It connected again and Crawdaunt struggled to get it off. Crawdaunt lunged forward, smashing Seedot away with a crunch and then toppling over. Seedot flew into the air, but managed to let off its bide. Red energy struck the fallen lobster which winced in pain. Both Pokemon were now exhausted. Crawdaunt’s energy was still draining. It was in a bad position to fight.

Suddenly, a white towel flew into the ring and landed softly in front of Crawdaunt. Jeff looked up to see Mr. Farken grinning. "I know when my Pokemon can't go on." He whispered. "You pass!"


*******

Graduation was held in the front park of the school the next day. Each trainer was called to the stage to receive their official licensed trainer cards. Mike saw Matt and his friend Kevin had both passed, and he was sure he would be seeing them throughout his journey.

"Now that you head out on your own adventures, remember what you have learned at Pokemon Tech. I hope to see each and every one of you come back here as champions!" The principal yelled. The students all threw their caps into the air and cheered excitedly.


After a short celebration, Mike, Amanda, and Jeff walked outside of the gates with packs in hand. Their Pokemon waddled along at their feet.

“Well, we better start off for Hoenn. We have a lot more to learn.” Mike said turning to his friends. With a nod they began to walk into the sunrise for a new adventure.

Next Chapter- A New Challenge! The Hoenn League
Mike and friends meet Prof. Birch and start their Hoenn adventure.

FlamingRuby
15th June 2005, 9:20 PM
Okay...one review, coming up!

Description: WOW!!!! This doesn't make me feel like I'm watching a movie, I AM watching a movie!
Characters: Very impressive cast! Each one has their moments, but Jeff kinda makes me want to giggle
Plot: I can't wait to see what adventures you have planned for our heroes!

Anything else?: I did spot a few spelling errors, but I'll let that go. I also can't wait to see the famous pineapple scene

Rating: ;026;

Is it any wonder you're one of SPP's best writers?

mindripper
15th June 2005, 9:29 PM
Nice story so far! With some errors though, mostly punctuation and wrong word usage. Nice way to make a catapult!! :)

Twilight Absol
15th June 2005, 10:32 PM
Very good, but there are some errors though, mostly with comma placements and missing commas, and once in awhile there are a few spelling errors. It's not very original, but it has its strong points, I'm very keen to see what you have in stock!

indigestible_wad
16th June 2005, 12:49 AM
I was expecting Mike to win, but I wanted him to lose. If he had won he would've been too much of a gary stu. Mike and amanda are both very cheerful and whatnot, which makes them very easy to turn into those perfect, goody-goody, unloveable characters. I hope you know what you're doing with them.

Jeff, on the other hand, adds comic relief, something that keeps the story from becoming far too comon. Hopefully you'll be able to keep him a tad whiny and sarcastic throughout the whole story.

GoldenNoctowl77
16th June 2005, 11:53 PM
Well, continuing with my remakre chapters, here is chapter 4; about 85% retyped. I added a lot of Jeff humor as he was almost not existent in this one. Also, this is pretty much the most unoriginal chapter, but give the fic a chance please. I'd say the first 10 chapters are unoriginal and then you'll see the true potential the fic has. After all, it was 55 chapters in with a constant set of readers before the pruning.

Chapter 4: A New Challenge! The Hoenn League!

Mike and his friends were now hiking through a dark forest road on their way to Hoenn. It had been a day‘s journey and the three were beginning to grow weary.

"Can't we stop and rest for just a second?" Jeff moaned, practically having to drag his feet along the dirty path. Mike sighed and looked down at Electrike. The Pokemon didn't seem to mind the hike at all. It was just as energetic as the moment they set off. The electric Pokemon ran a few feet ahead and turned around growling happily. It waited for the rest of the group to catch up, and then proceeded to do it again.

"Amanda, how close does it say we are?" Mike asked turning to his friend. Amanda, wanting any excuse to take a break, used this moment to stop walking and kneeled down to search through her sack. After some time, she pulled a large map from it and spread it across the ground.

"Probably a ten minute walk from here." she grinned looking up at the other two.

"A Whole ten minutes? Dude, let me just die right here and you can drag me the rest of the way!" Jeff growled.

“Or we could leave your carcass rotting here and continue on without it. That would be far more amusing.” Amanda replied smiling evilly as she packed away the map.

Mike had to admit he was growing tried, but he really didn‘t mind the hike that much. It was great exercise and the fresh air was wonderful. He took the time to look up into the canopy of the towering trees above, noticing a few Pidgeys that flew from branch to branch. The nervous birds looked down on them with curiosity.

"Just wait till I get to Hoenn, then I'll start catching some." he thought to himself. The group hiked through this terrain for about another hour before the trees finally began to fade into the distance behind them. Mike then found himself in a much nicer climate that reminded him of home. They were at a large beach that bordered a huge blue ocean. In fact, Bayside City connected with this same one, making Mike feel right at home. The trees here consisted of a few palms which was a new sight from the towering deciduous plants they were just traveling through. The group headed up the beach and onto the boardwalk that led into the city.

"Here we are, Little Root Town!" Amanda smirked pointing ahead.

The three stared at this beautiful town. Above them the quaint calls of Wingulls filled the heated sky. Their squawks echoed giving Mike the notion that this was a very peaceful place. He and his friends continued on for a few yards where they entered the actual town. It seemed more like a neighborhood; no Pokemon Center and only a few stores. The buildings were all old and small with wooden signs and antique decorative items. They seemed untouched by a lot of the modern world.

The group pushed into the city passing by many of the townsfolk as they went.

“We should really stop for lunch.” Mike commented pointing to a small diner at the end of the street.

“Oh no. I’ve heard about tiny diners before. They lure you in with their promises of good homemade food and low prices and then when you least expect it…BAM! You’ve contracted AIDS. It was all over the news.” Jeff said stopping in his tracks. Amanda and Mike turned around and eyed him strangely.

“Jeff, that was a money saver’s special report on which small diners are the best for businessmen to take their aids for lunch at.” Amanda said recalling the show that Jeff mentioned.

Jeff tilted his head and peered in between his friends. An old woman was sweeping the front sidewalk in front of the diner. She noticed he was looking at her and waved politely.

“I don’t trust her. She has AIDS written all over her.” Jeff said pointing her out to his friends. The others sighed and continued to the diner. Jeff slowly followed with his eyes on alert.

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"Do you guys have any idea how we sign up for this league?" Amanda asked sitting at a large booth while feeding Ralts.

"Bah, didn't even think about that." Mike sighed.

"There is a professor in this town! He could probably help us." Jeff suggested.

“How do you know?” Mike asked his friend with a curious smile.

“The news. It was talking about how he got AIDS and it helped him in studying Pokemon.” Jeff replied leaning back.

“I am traveling with a complete moron…” Amanda said wide-eyed at Jeff.

"Right, we'll walk up to a complete stranger's lab and demand he help us." Mike laughed sarcastically.

“But after lunch.” Amanda grinned back.


When the group had finished eating lunch, they left the diner and continued on. They walked outside the comfort of the town and traveled on the road looking out at the miles of beach coastline.

“If I remember correctly, the diseased professor’s lab is about two miles west of the main town.” Jeff said thinking as hard as he could.

The three walked along the road for a half hour with Jeff complaining the whole way. While the right side of the road contained massive sandy shorelines, the left side was a thick forest. It was like looking at two different ecosystems at once.

Suddenly, Electrike began to get jumpy and barked. It raced full speed into the darkness of the forest in a matter of moments.

"Electrike, come back!" Mike shouted and sped after it. It was very hard to keep up with the tiny sprinting Pokemon, but Mike began to hear faint cries of help in the distance, knowing that Electrike must have been alerted to it.

Electrike growled as they entered a clearing in the forest and saw the scene. An over sized man with brown hair in some khaki shorts and a lab coat was hanging on the branch of a tree. Down below a pack of small wolf-like puppies known as Poochyenas growled fiercely.

"Help me!" the man pleaded.

Jeff and Amanda caught up to Mike with their Pokemon in hands. “Woah, a fat man in a tree. Now I’ve seen everything.” Jeff commented.

"Electrike use spark!" Mike yelled pointing at the Poochyenas. The electric Pokemon shot out a bolt of lightning at the relentless pack, which yelped in surprise. They backed away and growled towards the group.

"Seedot, use explosion!" Jeff yelled not wanting to be left out. The little Pokemon grinned happily, and then stared at him confusedly.

"Yeah, let's wait till Seedot gets to level forty-three before we say that." Amanda said laughing and setting down her Pokemon. "Ralts, use growl!". Ralts let out a low and painful moan which caused the pack of Poochyena to yelp. They staggered back and then the lead one began to run into the forest. The rest of the pack howled and followed the leader.

With the threat gone, the man leapt from the branch and crashed down hard on the ground below. Mike walked over and helped him up and he thanked them all.

"The name is Professor Birch." he grinned and shook Mike’s hand.

"Wait a minute, you’re the Professor Jeff was talking about? And I was starting to doubt about my friend‘s mind!" Mike commented.

"Ha, well doubt it not. I‘m as real as they come." Birch gave a low laugh. "Those are some great Pokemon you have there. Let me guess; Pokemon Tech graduates?" he asked.

"Yep, that's us!" Amanda replied.

"Well now, accompany me to my lab heroes and we'll talk further." The professor grinned.

“Oh no! I said we would ask for your help, not spend the day with you. I heard on the news that you have AIDS. It could be contagious!” Jeff said backing away. “Seedot, get away from him before he contaminates you!” His tiny acorn Pokemon’s eyes widened and it fell to its side, spinning furiously back to its master.

“I beg your pardon, but I believe the report you are referring to was the one in which my new helping aids and I showed the audience my many theoretical studies.” Birch laughed. “And besides, if I did have AIDS, it isn’t a contagious disease…unless we engaged in swapping bodily fluids of some kind.”

“Are you coming on to me?” Jeff said with shocked eyes.

“I’m beginning to see why you doubted your friend’s sanity.” Birch remarked tuning to Mike.

After calming Jeff down, the three followed Birch through a small trail through the forest. It was obviously made by Birch himself as he knew every twist and turn and even stopped to show the teens Pokemon habitats that he discovered.

After awhile, the forest ended and a large building surrounded with palm trees appeared. It had a dome shaped roof and white bricking.

"This is my lab!" Birch said holding his hands up to mystify them. "Let's go inside, we have much to discuss." The doors opened and the group walked in to see a spiky-haired thin man look up. A woman with long blonde hair was next to him.

"Well, these are the only aids I have." Birch said grinning at Jeff with a sarcastic tone. The two aids smiled and continued his work.

"Professor, we were wondering how the heck we sign up for the Hoenn League." Jeff said rudely.

"Ha-ha, quite a spirit!" Birch laughed. "Well, you have to sign up in Oldale Town. It's the nearest place to here; about a day's walk. The Nurse Joy at the Pokemon Center there will help you." He explained and then continued. "Are any of my saviors hungry?"

"Nah, we just ate, but thanks." Mike replied.

"Well I have to do something for you rescuing me…wait I know!" a grin shot across the professor’s face.

“It doesn‘t involve swapping bodily fluids does it?” Jeff asked with concern.

"Come with me!" Birch said ignoring the teen. The three accompanied him into what looked like a storage room near the back of the lab. A large table in the middle sported three round Pokeballs.

"Each of you may have one of these." Birch grinned pulling the first Pokeball from the table. He pressed the small button and it opened up. The small gecko Pokemon opened its eyes and smiled.

"Treeeeko!" it growled.

"DIBS!" Jeff shouted. "It looks like the perfect dark type!" Jeff grabbed the Pokemon.

"Actually Jeff, Treecko is a grass type." Birch commented. Jeff stared at it for some time.

"Looks like you have a keen eye for grass types Jeff. Maybe you should train them!" Amanda laughed.

Suddenly Treecko was sailing into her face. "You have that one; I'm getting his dark type!" Jeff screamed after tossing the Pokemon.

"Sorry Jeff, you already picked it." Mike said laughing. Jeff sighed and picked Treecko off of Amanda who sputtered a bit and looked evilly at her friend. Treecko and Jeff glared at each other. The Pokemon admired his honesty and throwing arm, but it had the same personality as Jeff, which means it would be damned if it would show affection.

Birch then pulled another Pokeball from the table and released it. "Mudkip!" the cute blue dog-like Pokemon with fins on its face grinned. Amanda went starry eyed.

"Oh it's so cute. I want it!' she screamed and picked it up. She placed her cheek against its and rubbed against it. Mudkip seemed to enjoy it.

"Well, then that leaves this one for me." Mike said taking the last Pokeball and releasing the Pokemon.

In a flash of red light, a small orange chick formed on the ground. "Torchic!" It smiled happily.

"Wow, a fire type!" Mikes grinned remembering his studies at Pokemon Tech. He kneeled down and began to stroke the tiny bird‘s feathery head.

"Well that's it then." Birch laughed.

“Why are you giving us these? Shouldn’t some new trainers receive them?” Amanda inquired the professor.

“Actually, I hatch these three Pokemon once a month and raise them for three select trainers. It just so happens that this was a month with no scheduled new trainers to get them. So I thought, hey, why not give them to these new trainers!” Birch explained with a grin.

"Thanks so much!" Mike and Amanda replied.

“It’s too bad your immune system is failing or we could be friends!“ Jeff said with a saddened expression.

Mike released Electrike who sniffed at Torchic.

"This is our new buddy!" Mike commented. Electrike growled happily and began to chase Torchic around. The two Pokemon got along fine. Amanda introduced Ralts to Mudkip, and the two Pokemon were inseparable. Jeff tried to have Seedot and Treecko meet, but Seedot was more interested in rolling around. Treecko folded its arms in a distasteful manner.

Outside the lab, Mike and friends thanked Birch for all his help.

"It was my pleasure, seeing as how you saved me." he replied. Suddenly, the forest erupted in a cloud of smoke. Two voices were suddenly heard nearby.

"Team Magma, Team Aqua, who cares!
We joined together and now we're a pair!
Two people with the same dream; it's really fun!
And that is to steal everyone's Pokemon!"

The two voices ceased and two people that owned them appeared from the forest. One was a blonde haired woman dressed in blue jeans with a black and white stripped shirt and a blue bandana. The other was a dirty blonde-haired guy in a similar uniform, only the blue was red and he had a hood over his head.

"The name's Bonnie!" She laughed.

"And I'm Clyde!" The guy snapped.

"Uhh, aren't those thieves from the early 1900's?" Amanda asked extremely confused.

"Does it make a difference?" The two snapped. "We are here for the Pokemon Birch owns. Hand them over!"

"Not on your life!" Mike roared.

"Then we'll take them by force!" Clyde roared back.

“Is this just me, or does this seem completely unoriginal?” Jeff said looking at Amanda.

“Hey, all things start out unoriginal. Just give them a chance to get unique!” she replied with a wink.

Clyde threw a Pokeball to the ground. When the red disappeared, a small red slug called a Slugma was present. Bonnie threw her Pokeball next and a little blue Pokemon with antennas on its ears called Wooper appeared.

"Double battle!" The two team members said grinning.

“Double dumbness!” Jeff laughed. He then joined Mike in front of the two.

"Let us handle this!" they said to Birch. Mike released his new Torchic and Jeff called on Treecko.

"Torchic, use scratch!" Mike shouted. The little bird ran at Slugma and scratched hard with its feet, but the attack didn't seem to phase the slug.

"Slugma, use rock throw!" Clyde commanded.

"Slug…" The Pokemon roared as rocks were hurled at Torchic. It was struck hard and went flying back, a one hit KO.

"Torchic return!" Mike shouted.

Treecko then rushed in to pound Wooper.

"Slugma, use ember!" Clyde commanded. The Pokemon released the ball of fire, striking Treecko and knocking it out.

"You'll never beat us if you can't learn to have your Pokemon work together." Bonnie laughed.

"Electrike, show them what you got!" Mike roared.

"Ralts go!" Amanda stepped up. The four Pokemon glared at each other.

"Wooper water gun now!" Bonnie ordered. The Pokemon shot the water gun straight at Ralts.

"Electrike take the hit!" Mike commanded. The Pokemon flew in front and was doused, but it didn't seem hurt.

"Now use spark!" Electrike growled and released the ball of electricity. It struck Wooper but did nothing.

"My little Wooper is part ground type; you can't hurt it with weak electrical attacks!" Bonnie laughed.

"Slugma, use smog!" Clyde commanded.

"Ralts use confusion!" Amanda ordered. The Pokemon lifted its arms to its head and caught Slugma before it could release the attack.

"Electrike, use spark while it's stuck!" Mike shouted. The Pokemon sent another ball of electricity at Slugma, frying it.

"Now Ralts, send Slugma into Wooper!" Amanda commanded. Ralts did so and the Pokemon flew back into their masters.

"Electrike, quick attack!" Mike yelled. Electrike ran full speed. It jolted its own legs with electricity to gain velocity and smashed into the two thieves. They were flying sky high before they knew what hit them. "We'll be back!" They screamed and disappeared over the horizon.

Mike thanked Amanda for her help and petted Electrike. "Looks like we need more experience with our new Pokemon." He said. Amanda and Jeff agreed.

"That was a splendid battle!" Birch announced. “I foresee you doing very well in the Hoenn League!”

“Thanks professor. I think we’ll be heading out now though.” Mike said and shook the man’s hand.

“Bye man! Hope to see you again while you still have white blood cells.” Jeff replied. Birch rolled his eyes and started to wave as the three headed off down the road to Oldale City.

Next Chapter- An Unexpected Challenge! Off to the Archipelago!
Mike and friends sign up for the Hoenn League, but also stumble upon some secrets.

indigestible_wad
17th June 2005, 4:34 AM
You're right, that was a funny chapter. I was lol somewhat. I can't comment on how it changed but I'm sure it was drastically improved. But the climate ubruptly changes as soon as they exit the forest? And isn't hoenn supposed to be an island?


"We are here for the Pokemon Birch owns. Hand them over!"
What exactly are they supposed to hand over?

Chibi Pika
17th June 2005, 7:49 AM
Well well, I'm definately impressed. The description was at least enough to get a clear mental image, and even though there were errors, there didn't really disrupt the flow of the story.

Though I haven't read the later chapters, I am looking forward to where it gets original simply from your sumarries. I thought Amanda's comment on giving unoriginal things a chance was funny. XP

I like Jeff. ^^;;; He was especially hilarious in chapter 4. I can never get humor right, so I like seeing characters with lots of funny lines and such.

Well, overall, very good, I look forward to reading more of it.

~Chibi~;249-d;

mindripper
17th June 2005, 5:39 PM
Ok, some nice punning in there!
However, does it not seem a little weird to have the good guys losing in their battle and then throwing out other Pokemon to continue that fight? Seems a bit unethical!
Other than that, a pretty solid chapter.
As for mistakes, I saw some, but the most obvious was the misuse of "inertia"... You cannot gain inertia. sory for being scientific, but all bodies have inertia, and it is more of an obstacle than a help in your fic's situation.

Lust
17th June 2005, 5:52 PM
I really like the revised edition! There are some errors, but the plot is just great. I can't wait until you post the new chapters.

FlamingRuby
17th June 2005, 5:53 PM
Rather than re-doing to the whole evaluation again, I'll just leave a few comments:

--Like others have said, Jeff steals the show in this chapter!
--Second off, please try to watch your spelling! I think you were typing at a good clip, and stumbled over a few words

Other than that, good going thus far!

GoldenNoctowl77
17th June 2005, 6:09 PM
Indigestible_Wad- Always honest as usual, and I am very grateful for your continued support. It means a lot to me. Yeah, this fic focuses a lot on comedy while Apocalypse Rising is drama. Don't get me wrong, this fic is about to become very emotional where I left it off before the pruning. It was only four chapters away from the climax and then I had a big shocker after that before bringing it to a close. It's going to be amazing.

Chibi Pika- A new reader, thanks for taking the time! Yeah, everyone that reads this fic loves Jeff. I nailed that kid's personality perfectly. And Amanda's comment, lol. I noticed when I went back to rewrite this chapter that that scene was VERY unoriginal, and I expected a backlash from readers for it, so I included that covert statement to make up for it. Thanks for reading!

mindripper- Thanks for taking the time to review my fic again. Yeah, they used more Pokemon in defense, not for battle. And yeah, I just now caught that inertia thing. I was growing tired by the end of the chapter and let a few things slide. I'll edit that out and thanks again!

The Pokemon Master- Short and sweet, lol. Thanks for reading and more chapters are on the way!

FlamingRuby- Thanks for the review. Again, everyone loves Jeff's antics and they only get better. Everyone wonders what I'll have him do next and they keep getting more and more over the top. As for spelling, I notice a lot of you commenting on that but I read through every chapter for grammatical errors and spelling after and I correct them. I'm not noticing many at all. Maybe one or two, but not something to overly criticize in the fic. Thanks for being honest though, and I'll keep it in mind when I write on.

DANdotW
17th June 2005, 10:11 PM
Once again, you've amazed me by turning these two, once poor chapters into these beauties. I'm really glad you decided to rewrite them, it was a good idea. I hope the next chapters are as good as these ones. Keep up teh excellent work,

HG

Sike Saner
17th June 2005, 11:49 PM
After checking out the awesome Apocalypse Rising, I got the strong feeling I would enjoy this, too - and I was right! The description is excellent, just as I'd expected from you ;) . The Pokemon battles were quite enjoyable, indeed. And the humor kicks a thousand kinds of *** :D . Here's some highlights:


"What party?" Jeff asked giving Mike a look. Amanda and him had decided not to invite him after he showed up with alcohol at Mike's last one dressed like Britney Spears.

Now, there's a lovely image! :p


"You're the boy who my little Whitney said stole her bra at Bryce's pool party last week!" She recalled with a loud voice.

At which I actually stopped and pictured that scene in my mind - frickin' hilarious.


"Um, E, H, 4, 676...bra," Jeff began.


"Well I left my bra...I mean contacts at home!" he yelled.


"And Amanda, you got...a helmet head!" Jeff laughed.

JEFF ROCKS! He just does. But what's his #1 quote thus far?


"Mr. Farkin can go fark himself!"

Best. Quote. EVER!

But Mike had a few boss words of his own:


"I wonder how your Pokemon will take shock therapy to its ***?"

I am going to start using more Electric-types, just so I can have excuses to use that line!


"Is it just me, or does this seem completely unoriginal?" Jeff said looking at Amanda.

"Hey, all things start out unoriginal. Just give them a chance to get unique!" she replied with a wink.

Now, everyone and their mother has commented on this part. But, nonetheless, I will send it yet another ray of praise, for I simply must. It's just timeless.

This is a very enjoyable story. And since I didn't get to read it the first time around, it's all new to me, and I can't wait to see what lies ahead.

...What's this I keep hearing about a pineapple??

IceKing
18th June 2005, 2:35 AM
...What's this I keep hearing about a pineapple??

The pineapple is the MOST AWESOMEST POKEMON EVER!!!!!!!!!! But I think its another 20 chapters before we see him :(

Anyway, Im not really in the mood for one of my normal reviews so ill just give you a regular review.


Now we're hitting the gold! The whole AIDS thing was just way too hilarious, Jeff is way too awesome. I wish we'd see more flaws in Amanda and Mike that would make them more realistic. In the original thread, I didnt really see much of Mike coming out of his shell, except for the Parts with his brother and father. It might be a good idea to give him some sort of flaw. Description is pretty good as well, I liked the Bonnie Clyde battle, its nice that their at least half decent unlike Jessie and James. I wanted to point out that you make mistakes in your qoutations. Ive trained myself to hunt and destroy them in my own fic, that it drives me crazy in this fic!

"I like flowers," Mike said.

You need a comma instead of a period.

"I don't like flowers," the teacher said.
"I do!" she said

The and She dont have to be capitlized

Be sure to keep that in mind when you write future chapters! *sigh* Looks like I wont win anymore comedy awards for my fic now that you brought your fic back.

Bayleef Mistress
18th June 2005, 5:24 AM
I love this fic! Like everyone's said, spelling and quotation errors, but I don't like to burn my eyes out just to look for those. I like the description and comedy. Jeff is probably the funniest character. His stupidity makes me laugh! I give your fic a.....

9/10

Very good! Just work on proofreading and you'll be fine.

GoldenNoctowl77
18th June 2005, 7:43 PM
Thanks for all the replies guys and girls. Here is chapter 5 completly rewritten. Happy reading...

Chapter 5: An Unexpected Challenge! Off to the Archipelago!

It was a beautiful sunny day as Mike and his friends made their way along the rocky path that led towards Oldale Town. Mike and Amanda strolled up ahead as Jeff lagged behind, panting like a dog that just ran a marathon. They had been walking for several hours when the skyline of the small town appeared just over the hill in the distance. Everyone’s hopes had suddenly been revived.

“There it is Jeff! We made it,” Amanda said turning back. She noticed that Jeff was lying face down on the gravel with not so much as a wiggle. “Jeff, please, if you expect me to believe that you are dying of exhaustion you better actually die!”

Jeff leaned his head to the side, cracking his neck and pushing his upper body up with his hands. His lower half came next and he was standing once more.

“Woah, I was a goner for that moment,” he said grinning.

“You have some gravel stuck to your face that you might want to wipe away. It doesn’t look very presentable,” Mike said motioning to his face. Mike was completely obsessed with outward appearance. When he was twelve years old, he was one of the fattest kids in Bayside City, but some mean words from other people caused him to discover the Holy machine…the treadmill. The rest is history…now he was one of the best shaped teens in Bayside thanks to the machine and the help of some weight lifting and crunches.

Jeff wiped some of the gravel from his face causing it to rain to the ground with little pelting sounds. His eyebrows rose as he looked to Mike for approval.

“There you go, now we just have to figure out how to shrink that nose of yours,” Mike replied and hoisted his pack laughing away. Jeff cupped his nose with his hand and looked worried.

“My nose is not big!” he screamed at his friend, his hands clenched.

“Whatever you say,” Mike began and then started to walk down the path. “Nosepass…” was the comment that came next.

“You little freak! Come back here so I can kill you!” Jeff yelled throwing a tantrum; his arms flailing wildly in the air.

“Why don’t you use the compass in your nose to find this direction and come to me?” Mike asked with a devilish grin. He loved to tease Jeff, there was just something so satisfying about it.

“Come on you guys, this is getting us nose-where…I mean nowhere,” Amanda remarked trying to bring back peace. “Jeff, your big nose is nothing to be ashamed of, and Mike…you shouldn’t poke fun at it.”

“Yeah Mike, don’t make fun of my big no-” Jeff began before halting. “You little skank!” he said turning to Amanda. She just smiled and started after Mike. Jeff, steaming with anger, trotted after them. The three made it to the outskirts of the city with disappointed looks. The town was smaller than Little Root. There were a few select wooden homes, a Pokemon Shop, and a Pokemon Center; all within viewing site of their position.

“I was expecting the town for league registering to be as big as Jeff’s nose,” Mike said trying to throw in one last assault on Jeff’s self esteem before they went to register.

(What follows is a reply from Jeff so astounding that most of it had to be censored)

“Why you BLEEP BLEEP BLEEP! I out to kill you where you stand! I never made fun of your man BLEEP when you were a BLEEP BLEEP fat BLEEP! If my BLEEP nose was as big as you BLEEP say it is, I would BLEEP crush you with it! Now stop BLEEP making fun of it or I’ll BLEEP you up!” He yelled at the top of his lungs. The quaint citizens of the town stopped walking along the grassy paths and turned towards the travelers, their eyes filled with disgust. Mike and Amanda scuttled to the side behind some trees leaving Jeff the only one present.

“You’re a potty mouth!” an old woman shouted.

“And your nose IS big!” her husband replied. The two then started to walk away, cane and walker in hands.

“Damn kids these days. No respect for their elders,” the old lady said to her husband as they went.

Mike and Amanda appeared seconds later eyeing the stunned Jeff. He had not moved a muscle since the old couple barked at him.

“That got a little out of hand Jeff. I’m sorry,” Mike said holding out his hand. Jeff turned to face the friend that wanted a hand shake. He was tan, well-built with nice black hair, and Jeff was just left with a nose the size of a space station. It wasn’t fair, but he decided to end this anyways. He held up his own hand and the two made up.

“Well, I guess we should head to the Pokemon Center to register,” Amanda suggested. “I hope you can make it Jeff, it’s pretty far.”

Jeff looked into the town and saw it about a two minute walk from where they stood. “I can manage,” he replied.

The sun was now setting as the three kids made it to the Pokemon Center. They walked inside expecting a large crowd, but the building was almost empty. The inside‘s coloring reflected the outside‘s. The roof was red just like the furniture, and the floor was a light brown like the wood of the center‘s exterior. There were a few plants spread around, some chairs and couches, and a large round desk in the center. There, a young nurse with curled pink hair and a fair figure was leaning over the counter addressing a blonde haired teen with a thin build and glasses. He was busily studying a small blue broacher with his robin’s egg eyes.

"So can I interest you in this new challenge?" the nurse asked the teen. He looked up from the pamphlet and gave a steady smile.

"No thanks, Hoenn is where I belong. Island hopping isn't my thing," the boy replied. The nurse sighed and began to register the boy into the computer.

“Your last name was Beckett, correct?” She asked. The boy nodded and began to rock on his heels. Amanda and Jeff took this time to walk behind him waiting for their turn.

“Where’s Mike?” Amanda asked Jeff, her blue eyes fixed with concern. Jeff shrugged and Amanda looked around to see her friend had found a scale near the corner by a set of stairs.

“Oh no!” she wailed as he stepped on it.

Mike watched the little bar go forward towards his normal 140 lb mark. He had maintained 140 since he was thirteen, and it was a weight he planned to stay at. Nothing could stop him from-

“141!” he yelled as the blood curdling scream echoed throughout the center. The nurse and the blonde looked in shock.

“Oh god here we go again,” Amanda said placing her forehead into her hand.

“That’s it, the trip is over. I gained a pound since we started! Where the hell is a gym in this ‘town’, if that’s what you want to call it?” Mike roared. Jeff could almost detect steam rising from the angered teen.

“Calm down sir. The guests are sleeping. That scale has always been a pound more than the user’s true weight,” the nurse spoke quietly.

“Oh,” Mike said stepping off of the scale and backing away embarrassedly. The blonde haired boy moved to the side allowing Jeff and Amanda clearance to the desk. Mike joined them trying to pretend like that outburst never happened. He started to study the nurse, picking up on every detail. Her hair was neatly done; Mike had never seen a style like it. Her skin was pale, but it only aided in bringing out her hair color. She looked like she worked out and exercised enough, so Mike had no problem with her, in fact he found her quite attractive.

“Hello, my name is Joy. You three are new registries I presume,” She said gently. Her face seemed to grow excited as if she had some crazy scheme.

“Well, Mike here is the only one registering for the league. I’m registering for Contests and Jeff here is just tagging along. He’s lazy and has no goals in life,” Amanda remarked. Joy laughed a bit at that comment, annoying Jeff.

“I’ll have to register all of you just for identification purposes while you inhabit our continent. But, could I ask you to take a look at this first?” Joy asked handing the three the same pamphlet that the other boy was studying.

Mike took the literature and peered at the sky blue cover with ocean waves sliding across. The top said “Hoenn Archipelago! A new and interesting challenge awaits the Hoenn league participants!”

“I know I’m coming across like a telemarketer, but we really need fresh trainers to try it out,” Joy added in. Mike opened the pamphlet to see a large map with many islands. There was descriptions of many of the major cities and sites.

"I bet you're wondering what that is." Joy smiled.

“No, not really,” Jeff spoke up.

"Of course,” Mike admitted ignoring Jeff‘s statement. Nurse Joy rang a bell on the counter and a large pink Pokemon appeared from the hallway behind her. It held an egg inside a pouch on its stomach and a round body with curls spreading off of its head.

“Chancey, be a dear and go fetch Mr. Alabaster.” she told the Pokemon. The Pokemon smiled happily and waddled back into the hallway. "Though I am not the expert on this place, I am supposed to be offering it to trainers." Joy said turning back to the three teens. “Mr. Alabaster, the Hoenn League coordinator, has been staying here for the past several months offering this to new trainers.”

“But what exactly is it?” Amanda asked growing rather curious.

"The Hoenn Archipelago is Hoenn's newest challenge. They have been working on it for over fifteen years now on the islands just west of the continent, the ones Mr. Alabaster purchased. Instead of traveling through the Hoenn mainland, trainers can choose to take this route instead. It offers a fresh island hopping experience where you will travel mainly by water instead of hiking from city to city. The climate there is amazing as well. The Archipelago is similar to the Hoenn gym challenge, but it is completely fresh with new gyms and challenges. Trainers sail from island to island and collect the eight new badges there. There are new contest buildings, cities, and everything!" Joy explained.

Mike nodded and continued to study the broacher. It looked a lot nicer traveling through islands instead of a continent full of trees and mountains.

"Why did the Hoenn District set this up?" he inquired.

"I believe I can answer that," a slightly overweight and balding old man said as he stepped into the lobby. Mike’s first thought when he saw him was that he never wanted to look like that when he was older. Chansey accompanied the man to the front desk and Nurse Joy thanked it. She then introduced the group to Mr. Alabaster.

"The Hoenn district sought new ways to promote their league; after all, our attendance has been declining over the years. We are happy to say that we are the first league to promote two different paths to take. This will bring back trainers who competed in the league once now that they can earn the eight new badges to participate again. You see, whichever path you take, you'll still end up at the same league competition held in Evergrande City," Mr. Alabaster finished.

Mike took this all in and looked for an opinion from his friends.

"Why are you promoting this to us though?" Amanda questioned. Mr. Alabaster smiled.

"My dear, this league has only recently opened up. Most trainers already started their Hoenn journey so there aren't many that are taking our new challenge. We need beta testers if you will," he replied. "So far we have about a thousand trainers that have registered for it,” Mr. Alabaster pulled a sheet from the counter and showed Mike and friends a chart with pictures and names of the trainers currently enrolled in the archipelago. Mike took the list from the bald man and flipped through a few pages.

“Of course, not all of these trainers are registered for the league. We keep strict records on ANYONE that wants to travel to the island. Some of these people are just going there for enjoyment and training,” Mr. Alabaster explained. Mike noticed that his brother and Kevin both appeared on the list.

“Surprising!” he said out loud to no one in particular.

"Why don't we give it a try?" Amanda spoke up. Jeff looked hesitant, but Mike nodded in agreement.

"Traveling the seas beats land any day!" he said excitedly. Mr. Alabaster smiled and motioned to Nurse Joy.

“Names please,” Joy said.

“Mike Strateri. We’re all from Bayside City,” Mike began.

“Amanda Belicina,” Amanda chirped up.

“Jeff Flays,” Jeff said with little enthusiasm.

“Smile!” Joy said holding up a camera. Each trainer’s picture was taken in a flash. She then asked for some other information. The computer began to spit out small cards. Joy fished them from the dispenser and handed them to their respected trainers. These were their trainer licenses. Mike had the perfect picture of him; his smile was awesome. The card said his name, location, age, and other assorted descriptions. The bottom was tinted green and had the words “League Competitor” in bold.

“Amanda’s was similar, her picture amazing as well. On the bottom of her card was a purple tint that read “Contest Competitor”.

Jeff’s picture came out rather fuzzy and he sported an angry look. His bottom was tinted white and said “Leisure and Training” on it.

“Look Jeff, your nose didn’t take up the whole photo!” Mike said mockingly. Jeff clenched his fists and began to count.

Joy then handed Amanda a small map with a guidebook. “These items will help you in your travels,” she said.

Mr. Alabaster then approached. "As compensation for your beta testing, I present each of you with a Pokenav." he smiled with excitement. “These small computer-like devices will be like your own personal phone, complete with address book, recent news in Hoenn, a more detailed map, and a special Contest page,” he explained with a grin to Amanda.

Amanda was given a pink one, while Mike and Jeff got green ones. "This is Devon Corporation's latest version,” he grinned. Mike and his friends thanked him.

Mike then turned to Amanda. "We'll spend the night here and head towards the harbor first thing tomorrow," he murmured. Amanda nodded in agreement. The three then walked to the sitting area and sat down; each inspecting their new contraptions.

“There is a ferry leaving tomorrow from the Wingull Cove Harbor just west of here. It will take you to Burgundy City, the first island of the Archipelago, and one of the finest I might add,” Mr. Alabaster explained. With that, he bowed and took his leave.

The blonde boy from the desk sat down beside Mike and smiled. "The name's Justin Beckett," He said.

“Mike Strateri, Amanda Belicina, and Jeff Flays,“ Mike introduced himself and his friends.

"So you guys are being guinea pigs huh?" Justin laughed. "There's no way they'd get me to go island hopping, though I hear the scenery is beautiful there," he seemed interested to make friends.

"So are you just starting your adventure?" Mike asked the boy while noticing he was wearing a cool green shirt with the words “Hoenn their right mind hates Hoenn” on it .

"Yeah, Chikorita and I!" Justin replied.

Mike grinned. "How bout a practice match? I know it's late but I'm really in the mood."

Justin nodded and the two boys headed outside to a practice field that was behind the center. Amanda turned to have Jeff follow, but he was fast asleep on the bench. She smiled and headed outside.


"Go Chikorita!" Justin said as the ball landed at his feet. The Pokemon took shape ready to battle. It was a small yellow Pokemon with a huge leaf propping out of its tiny head.

"Go Torchic!" Mike yelled. Torchic took shape and happily jumped up and down.

"Chikorita, tackle it!" Jeff ordered. Chikorita rushed in and battered Torchic. It flew back, but was ready for more.

"Torchic, use ember!" Mike yelled. The tiny bird opened its mouth and tiny bolts of flames sprayed out. Chikorita dodged for a while, but a stray ember caught its leaf starting a small fire.

"Chikorita, twirl your leaf to put it out!" Justin shouted. Chikorita did so, the leaf gyrating hard causing the wind to subdue the fire. It glared at Torchic looking ready for more. "Now use vine whip!" he yelled. Vines emerged from Chikorita's neck and wrapped around Torchic. Mike was shocked at Justin’s ability to so cleverly eradicate the fire.

"Torchic, peck the vines!" Mike commanded. Torchic went haywire on the vines, causing Chikorita to let go. "Now scratch it!"

Torchic ran full blast at Chikorita, but it dodged out of the way.

"Tackle again!" Justin shouted. Chikorita tackled Torchic and sent it sprawling. Mike thought it was over, but the Pokemon was up seconds later.

“Good job Torchic, now use ember again!" Mike yelled. Torchic released the fireballs towards Chikorita, but a barrier formed in front of it.

"Nice reflect Chikorita!" Justin grinned. "Razor Leaf!" Chikorita shots leaves towards Torchic, but Mike had it burn them away.

"Torchic, use focus energy!" Mike yelled. Torchic closed its eyes and focused in on Chikorita.

"Vine whip!" Justin commanded. The vines shot at Torchic, but it dodged.

"Sand attack!" Mike roared. The sand blinded Chikorita and it shook its head desperately trying to see again. "Now ember!" The fire hit Chikorita and it went down hard. Slowly, it rose to its feet.

“Chikorita, poison powder!” Justin muttered. His Pokemon straightened its leaf and sent a purple shower of fumes towards Torchic. The small bird began to cough and stumble. “Now, finish it with tackle!”

“Torchic, stand your ground and use ember!” Mike shouted. His Pokemon clawed at the ground as the poison caused it to sweat. A small ball of flames appeared inside its beak. Chikorita smashed into Torchic as it released the flames, burning Chikorita right in the face. Both Pokemon sailed back. Torchic propped itself up, looking extremely worn as the poison enveloped it. However, Mike noticed that Chikorita was not rising. It was out, and had no strength to go on. He had won!

"Chikorita return!" Justin commanded. The Pokemon was enveloped in red and soon disappeared inside the Pokeball. Mike walked across the field and shook Justin‘s hand.

"Great battle!" he said. Suddenly they heard Nurse Joy screaming from inside the center. The two turned to see Bonnie and Clyde, the two menaces from before, rushing from the Pokecenter with many Pokeballs on a cart.

"Team Magma, Team Aqua, who cares!
We joined together and now we're a pair!
Two people with the same dream; it's really fun!
And that is to steal everyone's Pokemon!"
The two shouted as they ran off.

"Geeze, how'd they return so quickly?" Mike asked to no one in particular. Justin stepped up to join him. "Team Steam, they're at it again!" Mike said to him and chased after them. Amanda placed her hands up with confusion and then skipped in their direction.

Meanwhile, Jeff had woken up from his nap. "Where the hell is everybody?" he looked around but the Pokecenter was completely empty. With an angry look on his face, he stormed outside and into the woods.

Team Steam was running full blast with the cart in hand. They released Slugma and Wooper, who attacked from the cart. Wooper shot a water gun at the ground, making it muddy and slipping Mike, Amanda, and Justin up. The three slid across the ground and their Pokeballs flew onto the dirt. Bonnie left the cart; grabbed them, and headed back.

"Come back here!" Mike yelled, he, Justin, and Amanda now Pokemonless. Nurse Joy and Mr. Alabaster approached, but they too had no Pokemon.

"We're going to get away!" Bonnie grinned. Suddenly a barrage of razor leaves sailed by them, chopping the wheels from the cart. It toppled over spilling Pokeballs, Wooper, and Slugma.

"Give them back!" Jeff yelled with Seedot and Treecko in front of him.

"You ruined our getaway you moron!" Clyde yelled. Jeff ordered Treecko to pound Slugma, which hit the slug hard and sending it spiraling into the fallen cart.

"Ugh, there's plenty of Pokeballs here to use against you!" Clyde remarked and threw one. It opened up to reveal a flopping red and yellow fish, a Magikarp. Nurse Joy laughed a bit.

"Today was my annual Magikarp check up day!" she remarked. Clyde grabbed his head and Bonnie sent in Wooper. It used slam on Treecko as Seedot rolled around them. Seedot made it to the Pokeballs and began to kick them over to Mike.

"No, our perfect plan ruined by a seed!" Bonnie yelled. Mike found Electrike‘s teal Pokeball and released the growling Pokemon. Amanda called out Mudkip, and Justin released Chikorita.

"Spark, water gun, razor leaf!" They all said together. The attacks struck Team Steam, sending them flying into the sky and disappearing.

"Yeah!" everyone shouted. Amanda picked up her Mudkip and hugged it.

"Great job Electrike!" Mike said petting it.

"You have some great Pokemon!" Justin commented.

"If it wasn't for Jeff they would've gotten away." Nurse Joy exclaimed.

“Damn right!“ Jeff said folding his arms.

The next day Mike, his friends, and Justin waved goodbye to Nurse Joy and Mr. Alabaster as they headed out. The group came to a crossroad. To the right was a sign that pointed in the large Wingull Cove Harbor’s direction, the place that held the ferry to take them to the Hoenn Archipelago. To the left was the road to Petalburg City, where Justin was heading.

"See you at the Hoenn League tournament!" Mike said and he and Justin shook hands. With one final goodbye, the group headed into the harbor.

FlamingRuby
18th June 2005, 7:55 PM
::stiffles more giggles::

I wish my humor was as good as yours...

Sike Saner
18th June 2005, 8:08 PM
I JUST ABOUT DIED. The Nosepass gags were awesome. I've actually called people "Nosepass" before, or else named Nosepass after them...shame on me. :p


"I bet you're wondering what that is." Joy smiled.

"No, not really," Jeff spoke up.

Did I mention that Jeff is awesome? :D

Hilarious stuff. I'll definitely be seeing this one through to the end!

GoldenNoctowl77
19th June 2005, 1:29 AM
FlamingRuby- Woah, you read it within 10 minutes after I posted it. LOL, talk about dedicated. I will find time to read your fics, I just worked all night yesterday, have many grad parties today (I just came home to change and am leaving again soon) and tomorrow I work but I will find time, trust me.

Sike Saner- I love your reviews! LOL. I'm so happy I asked you to read them because you show such a great enthusiam when reviewing. Yep, Jeff's humor is apparent in this one. In the original he was pretty much a background character with one or two lines in this chapter. The opening with all the nose jokes was only a single paragraph in the original as well. LOL Thanks for reading, and it only gets better from here on out.

Lucent Latias- Thanks for taking the time to read my fics. I will get around to yours as well. Yeah, I try to make the most likeable characters possible. I know these characters aren't as in depth as the ones in Apocalypse Rising, but they are indeed cool. I never expected Jeff to get this popular. When I originally planned the fic I wanted Mike to be the character based off me, but overtime it was only his physical appearance that did. While I share qualities of his physically, my personality is ALL Jeff. I am really that stupidly funny in real life :p.

A new remake chapter is already being written. It should be up tomorrow or late tonight. Thanks again for reviewing guys, it means a lot!

FlamingRuby
19th June 2005, 2:24 AM
You're welcome!

I just happened to find it up, so i read it!

(a new entry is up in Pikachu's Johto Diaries, for the record)

GoldenNoctowl77
19th June 2005, 5:27 PM
Hey, just got done with another remake chapter. I enjoyed writing this one the first time, and rewriting it was fun as well. Enjoy!


Chapter 6: Taillow Trouble! Last Plunge for the Ferry!

Mike and his friends were now walking along the boardwalk of a very elegant harbor that bordered the sea. Mike saw hundreds of boats docked on the shoreline and many sailors busily attending to their daily activities. Buildings that wreaked of fish and ocean water lined the boardwalk. This was Wingull Cove Harbor, and the teens could tell instantly where it got its name from. Up above, flocks of small white and blue Pokemon flew calling out against the wind. These were Wingulls, bird Pokemon that made their homes by the ocean.

“If one of those birds craps on me there will be hell to pay,” Jeff snarled.

As they passed a small store, they noticed a sailor with a hat on; shading his brown hair under it. He was somewhat muscular and had a tattoo on his right shoulder that was exposed to the sun. He was busily writing on a white board that clung to the wall of the building; indicating his day’s capture.

“Excuse me sir, but could you tell us when the ferry for the Hoenn Archipelago leaves?” Amanda asked politely while approaching him. The sailor began to eye her, grinning stylishly and placing his hands in a thinking position.

“The ferry leaves in an hour. In fact, I am boarding that vessel today as well. I have some fishing business to attend to at Burgundy City,” he responded. “The name’s Greg Donald.”

Amanda thanked the man for the information. “Tell you what, since you’re such a pretty girl, if you meet me back here in the next half hour I will give you all a free ride aboard the ship,” Greg said excitedly. Amanda began to blush and push at the ground with her toes.

“How would you manage that?” Mike demanded to know, a little agitated with the man. He was becoming too flirty with Amanda and Mike didn’t like it. Amanda was his crush and no one, especially a sailor in crappy clothes and a poorly shaven chin, was going to change that.

“I’ve worked in this Harbor for ten years now. I was ten when I started. These ferries give me free access to everything. I have so many ferry passes that I stopped filing them away!” Greg countered.

“Fair enough,” Mike retorted, angered to find out the man wasn’t lying.

“Thanks for your generosity sir,” Amanda beamed.

“God, why don’t you just start taking your clothes off now? With that tone of voice you’re practically asking for-” Jeff sassed before being cut off by an elbow to the gut.

“Shut it Jeff!” Amanda hollered angrily.

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"What are we going to for a whole hour?" Jeff groaned as the group walked on along the harbor. Mike spied a nearby bench and the three of them sat down.

"Why don't you just take in the nice cool sea air?" he suggested to his friend. Jeff glared at him.

"Sea air? It smells like rotting fish guts and Wingull poop to me." he riposted. Mike sighed and looked out to sea. There were so many Wingull out there that it looked like a giant cloud covered the harbor. There was one bird in particular that caught Mike's eye. Though it was far away, Mike could tell it wasn't white in color.

The bird seemed to be dipping down toward the water and heading to shore fast. Behind it, a flock of Wingulls gave chase, cawing madly. Mike stood up and put his hand over his eyes to block out the glare from the sun that burned above. The bird was closing in towards them and when it reached the nearest boat it pulled up and shot across the boardwalk. Mike took out his Pokedex to see what it was, holding the machine up and focusing it in on the bright blue and speedy Pokemon.

"Taillow; the tiny swallow Pokemon- Taillow courageously stands its ground against foes, however strong they may be. The gutsy Pokemon will remain defiant even after a loss. On the other hand, it cries loudly if it becomes hungry." Mike put the Pokedex away and smiled.

"Taillow sounds like an awesome Pokemon!" Mike snickered and turned to the others. The Wingulls were now pecking at the Taillow furiously, but the tiny Pokemon fought back even though it was greatly outnumbered. Mike watched it fly over the buildings behind them and disappear into the forest that bordered the harbor. The angry cries of the Wingulls died down as they went.

"I have to catch it. I'll be back before the ferry leaves," Mike murmured and ran off.

"Mike, ugh, you're going to miss the boat. Come back!" Amanda screeched. Mike didn't care. The thought of capturing such a cool Pokemon was the only thing in his mind. The bird was awesome, and he knew that in owning and displaying it in battle, he would be the definition of cool.

He stepped out of the harbor and straight into the forest, grinning to himself the whole way.

Meanwhile, behind some bushes, Team Steam watched Mike rush into the tree line leaving his friends behind.

"Maybe we aught to catch that Taillow," Bonnie proposed turning to Clyde.

"Good idea!" Clyde responded. "It will be hard with that moron kid around, but who's the more experienced captors here?" Bonnie laughed at her friends rhetorical question and the two headed after Mike into the forest.

Mike walked along the foliage listening for any sign of the fighting birds. The bushes rustled to the side and he turned, but only a Rattata emerged.

"You're not what I'm looking for." Mike said disappointingly.

"Electrike, come out buddy!" Mike shouted and released his starter. "Electrike, you have a good nose. Why don't you smell out a Taillow for me?" he asked it. Electrike growled happily and began its search. Mike followed the Pokemon some ways as it inspected every bush and stump, sniffing wildly. Mike wondered if the Pokemon was actually searching or just examining the items around it. This thought was put to rest when he heard a large amount of squawking just through the trees ahead. He ran towards the noise finding that the forest opened into a wide field where Taillow was on the ground. The Wingull flock continued to batter it, endlessly shrieking and jabbing at the fallen bird.

"Electrike, use spark…or maybe just a quick attack so you don't hurt Taillow." Mike yelled. Electrike nodded and raced towards the squawking pests. The Wingulls backed away in fright, and then proceeded to peck at Electrike.

"Not the best of ideas," Mike said nervously. "Electrike, just lead them away from Taillow and give them a good sparking!" Electrike happily ran with the pursuing birds as if it was a game, and then shocked the crap out of them. The birds cried out in pain, flapping away from the electrified Pokemon frantically. They shrieked and flew off.

"Great job pal!" Mike yelled. Electrike smiled and proceeded to run around the field.

Mike walked up to the fallen Pokemon. As soon as it saw him, its eyes turned angered, and it jolted up into the sky.

"I'm not going to hurt you buddy," Mike started to say but Taillow wouldn‘t have it. The Pokemon flapped once then dive bombed Mike and began pecking him fiercely.

"Ahh, get it away!" Mike bawled. Electrike yelped and ran toward him, trying to help its master out. It used spark, but Taillow dodged and flew off and the attack only collided with Mike. After a good screaming and some twitching, he collapsed to the ground sizzling. Electrike ran up and began to lick him, but Mike was soon on his feet. During this time, Taillow had flown off into the trees.

Meanwhile, Amanda and Jeff had met with Greg at the docks in front of the Sea Queen, the vessel that would take them to the Archipelago.

"Here you go, just as I promised," Greg declared handing the two three tickets. Amanda thanked him once again.

"You guys want to board right now?" he asked scooting a little closer to Amanda.

Jeff nodded. "I want out of this stink hole and into a nice cozy bed! And it also seems as if you two desire the same-" he sarcastically remarked before once again being silenced. Amanda turned her head away from him and smiled at Greg.

"You guys go on ahead. I have to make sure Mike makes it on board," she replied. Greg shrugged and started towards the ferry’s boarding ramp. Jeff didn’t budge.

“Why aren’t you going?” Amanda inquired.

“Are you kidding me? That guy practically jumped you, what do you think he’d do alone on a ship with a shockingly good looking guy like me?” Jeff answered running his hand through his hair.

“You are so screwed up…” Amanda retorted.

Team Steam was now lost in the forest wondering where they were.

"We haven't seen that Taillow or the moron in ages," Clyde moaned as they pressed on. "I could use some water. Maybe we should go back to the harbor."

Bonnie turned around and glared at him. "You want to give in so fast? We need that Taillow!" she yelped. No sooner did she say that then Taillow crashed through the canopy above. It landed on a branch overhead and began to nurse one of its wings with its beak.

"Speak of the birdie!" Bonnie laughed, a devilish grin growing across her face. "Go Wooper!" The Pokeball was thrown and opened and the tiny blue Pokemon appeared. "Water gun the thing out of the tree!" Bonnie demanded. Wooper‘s cheeks began to swell as water was lifted up from its esophagus. The Pokemon launched the stream of water, but Taillow just flew off the branch to dodge. It then flew down and began to peck Bonnie endlessly square on the head.

"Ow! Crap! Stop it! Don't just stand there Clyde!" she roared. Clyde nodded and tossed a Pokeball, releasing his fiery friend, Slugma.

"Slugma, use ember!" Clyde commanded. Bonnie went numb as she saw the Pokemon open its mouth.

"You dumb fu-" was all she muttered before the fire engulfed her head. Taillow flew back onto the branch and laughed as Bonnie ran back and forth down below. Clyde put his hands behind his head and started panicking.

“What do I do, what do I do, WHAT DO I DO?” he cried endlessly jogging in place. Wooper laughed a bit, and then doused Bonnie with water. The Aqua member breathed heavily, and then walked up and slugged Clyde hard right across the face.

Mike suddenly entered the area through some bushes to the right. Taillow saw him and flew down. It began to peck at him hard again, and Mike swatted at it.

"Not you guys…owww…again!" he yelled as the Pokemon continued its fun.

"Yes it's us you nitwit!" Bonnie roared. "We want that Taillow, so why wouldn't we come here?"

Mike glared at them. "Electrike, get rid of them!" he directed.

"Slugma, Wooper, attack!" Team Steam shouted.

"Two against one isn't fair, so I‘ll make it fair! Go Torchic!" Mike shouted. The little bird Pokemon appeared and began jumping.

"Slugma, smog attack!" Clyde ordered. The forest was soon filled with thick smoke, and Mike couldn't see anything.

"Ha-ha, Wooper use water gun on Torchic!" Bonnie followed up. Wooper found its way through the fog and nailed Torchic hard.

"I can't battle if I can't see!" Mike said to himself. Suddenly, the smog started to drift away as a blast of wind came from above. Mike looked up to see Taillow flapping its wings wildly using whirlwind.

"So you want to help?" he questioned it. Taillow let out a cry and swooped down.

"Hey if two against one isn't fair, then three against two isn't either!" Clyde yelled out.

"I don't play by the rules with you two!" Mike grinned. "Electrike, take care of them!"

Electrike ran at Wooper and battered it hard. Wooper tumbled back and Bonnie roared in anger.

"Slugma, ember!" Clyde yelled. The attack headed straight for Electrike, but Taillow blew it away with whirlwind. It then flew down and wing attacked Slugma away.

"Torchic, let's fry our friends before they go, shall we?" Mike grinned. Torchic let out a barrage of fireballs that charred Team Steam.

"Enough!" they cried trying to jig away from the fire.

"They've had enough, do what you want with them Taillow!" Mike grinned. Taillow nodded and created another large whirlwind, launching it at Team Steam and sending them spiraling through the woods.

Electrike and Torchic leapt happily and Taillow flew down to peck Mike.

"Oww!" Mike yelled grapping his head. Taillow then flew a few feet away and taunted him. "You want a match, huh?" Mike laughed. "Electrike go!" As he did this he also recalled Torchic to its Pokeball.

Electrike ran in with a happy growl. Taillow started by swooping down, but Electrike easily dodged to the right.

"Taillow may be fast, but we're faster!" Mike stated. Electrike nodded and started to run around the area. Taillow watched it as it went, not able to follow for long.

"Electrike, use spark!" Mike called out. Electrike stopped and shot the ball of electricity at Taillow. It hit hard, but Taillow cupped its wings and pulled them back to break free of it. The Pokemon then plunged down and wing attacked Electrike while it recharged. Electrike rolled back, but flipped back up ready for more.

Mike could tell that Taillow was now tired, and one more spark should do it in. "Let's confuse it with our speed again!" he shouted. Electrike began to run again, but Taillow swooped down right in front of it. It quick attacked Electrike, causing the electric Pokemon to fall back.

"Hmm, it knows my strategy. Smart bird," Mike thought to himself. Taillow seemed happy with itself as it flew back up.

"Electrike, use howl!" Mike thought up. Electrike let out a piercing growl that stimulated its own muscles to give it strength.

"Make it come in low!" Mike shouted. Electrike nodded and released a spark straight at the Pokemon. Taillow dodged and flew down to counter.

"Quick attack!" Mike screeched pointing his finger into the air. Electrike ran full speed and smashed into Taillow. The bird let out a squawk and tumbled backward landing hard onto the ground. Mike pulled out one of the Pokemon Tech balls he got from school and clenched it in his hands. He smiled as he chucked it at Taillow.

"Pokeball go!" He screamed. This was the first time he ever said this, but it would not be his last, not by far.

The ball hit Taillow and enveloped it in red light. Taillow was sucked in, and the shaking process began. Mike had learned in school that the vibrating portion of the capture indicated that the Pokemon was struggling to break free of its new-found state. He watched the ball shake for some time until it finally came to a passive state on the ground. The center switch dimmed and made a locking noise.

Mike had made his first actual capture! He jumped and rushed to pick up his new Pokeball. Electrike ran to him and Mike thanked it. He then juggled the new Pokeball and tossed it into the air, releasing their new friend. Taillow emerged from its ball and immediately flew down to greet its trainer…by pecking endlessly at his head. He could tell it didn't mean to harm him. It was showing affection, but that pointy beak still hurt.

It was at this awkward moment that Mike remembered that he needed to make it back to the harbor or it would leave him here. He panicked as he straddled his pack and rushed off through the forest, hoping he was going the right way. Electrike and Taillow followed close behind.

Mike erupted from the tree line and rushed into the harbor to see Amanda waiting by a large red and black vessel. The ferry was beginning to pull up its boarding ramp. She saw him and began to motion a hurry sign but suddenly a cargo truck drove right in between them and stopped, the creaking breaks being the signal of this.

"Amanda, I can't get by!" Mike yelled over the truck while jogging in place. A plastic card flew over the truck and landed at his feet. It was the ticket he needed to board the ship. Amanda ran up the ramp into the ferry coming into view above the truck. As she did, she motioned to the right of Mike. He turned to see a ladder that led to the roof of a nearby building. He quickly recalled his two Pokemon and ran toward it.

Mike climbed the ladder and looked out over the cargo car. It was a long fall. He then had a glorious idea. He called out his new bird Taillow, who came out in a barrage of pecks. After calming it down, he clutched his hands around the Pokemon’s feet and leapt off the roof. The bird flapped violently at this new predicament and held him up just enough to glide safely over the cargo car. Mike landed on his feet on the pavement just in front of the vessel and quickly recalled his Pokemon with a thanks. He showed his ticket to the employee and boarded the ferry.

"Wow, what a day!" he said as he approached Amanda. "Where's Jeff?"

"Sleeping of course, didn't think you'd make it!" she replied.

"Good thing I had Taillow," Mike replied back.

“I take it you have a new Pokemon then,“ Amanda said curiously. Mike nodded and the two then headed toward their room.

Bayleef Mistress
19th June 2005, 5:48 PM
great chapter! The length is good, the description is okay, spelling is fine. And I liked the humour. how Tailow pecked Mike on the head, and Jeff's comments. keep up the good work!

indigestible_wad
19th June 2005, 8:16 PM
You should've shown how Bonnie and Clyde ended up going along too. Becasuse it's obvous they will be back. But theyll appear randomly sometime in the next chapter, it's apparent.

I can see how this chapter was fun to make. Jeff's idiocy, the battle.

Oh, and before I forget, aught is spelled ought, not out. You missed that in the beginning of the fifth chapter

IceKing
19th June 2005, 8:23 PM
I SPENT AN HOUR ON THIS REVIEW SO PLEASE READ IT AND RESPOND! I DONT WANT IT TO GO TO WASTE!

Man, why didnt you write this fast with the Original Version with the latest chapters.

Chapter Five Review


Mike was completely obsessed with outward appearance.

OOO! OOO! FLAW! FLAW! *CLAPS HANDS* Although, the whole perfect body thign kinda made it eee eee (I have a very weird vocabulary, okay?)


He loved to tease Jeff, there was just something so satisfying about it.


Yay, another one!


Mike watched the little bar go forward towards his normal 140 lb mark. He had maintained 140 since he was thirteen, and it was a weight he planned to stay at. Nothing could stop him from-

“141!” he yelled as the blood curdling scream echoed throughout the center. The nurse and the blonde looked in shock.

Alright, I think its safe to say that Mike is clear of the perfect goody goody curse now.


Looks like this chapter was a great turnign point for Mike's charachter by making him a little girly man. Normally, Id think it would be a sign of a Gary-Stu, but you handled it VERY well. Amanda seems alright I dont think she needs such a DRASTIC change like Mike got.

Description was alright in this chapter as well. Although, the description of the Nurse Joy was kinda weird in my opinion. Justin was fine, hes not that crucial of a charachter so he doesnt neeed one of those crazy descriptions. Although Chikorita could have used a little more than small yellow pokemon (probably refer to the fact that she was sort of like a baby dinosaur). These are all just my personal opinion tho.

The battle scene was handled well. Good use of strategy rather than just yelling out attacks especially with Chikorita extinguishing the fire. I wish we can see some more personality from the main charachters pokemon however, so they dont become dreaded PokeBots.

I also noted that you stopped making those dialogue mistakes most of the time, good job with that. There are still grammar mistakes here and there and I coudl go and point them out, but Im feeling lazy today :(

I could continue to take tiny things to gripe about because I dont like giving reviews with all praise because Im acoustomed to mainly reviewing beginer fics. Now its time for the praise! You are truly a funny man. The whole nose scene had me literally cracking up. Its very rare for a comedy fic to have me laugh out loud, I give you props for that. This seriously is one of the best fics I have ever read, keep up the good work BUT BE SURE TO KEEP IN MIND MY NIT PICKING!


Chapter Six Review *Phew, im already exhausted from the chapter five review*

[color=blue]Humor and Interesting Line Evaluation[/blue]


Amanda was his crush and no one, especially a sailor in crappy clothes and a poorly shaven chin, was going to change that.


Hmm, unless I misread, this is the first time in the fic Mike admitted he liked Amanda. Makes me wonder if in this revised version there will be any bigger signs of Girlyshipping (I will call it that since Mike is a girly-man, whether you like it or not :)



“God, why don’t you just start taking your clothes off now? With that tone of voice you’re practically asking for-” Jeff sassed before being cut off by an elbow to the gut.

“Shut it Jeff!” Amanda hollered angrily.

Holy ****! That was absolutely hilarious, if it wasnt for my sore throat I would have laughed for nearly five minutes straight. So far in the fic, that is my favorite line.


“Are you kidding me? That guy practically jumped you, what do you think he’d do alone on a ship with a shockingly good looking guy like me?” Jeff answered running his hand through his hair.

Poor Jeff, thinks he's so sexy even straight guys want him.


Taillow emerged from its ball and immediately flew down to greet its trainer…by pecking endlessly at his head.


I might be exaggerating it in my mind since I saw a familiar HILARIOUS scene on the Simpsons but I gotta say I cant get enough of the pecking face thing.

[color=blue]Grammar Evaluation[/blue]


Mike walked along the foliage listening for any sign of the fighting Pokemon

That sentence is kinda confusing because it makes it sounds like hes looking for a real fighting pokemon.


As soon as it saw him, its eyes turned angered, and it jolted up into the sky.

A few missing commas in that sentence.


The Pokemon launched the stream of water, but the Taillow just flew off the branch to dodge.

Tailow=Subject Flew=Predicate so there needs to be a comma before the but


Clyde nodded and tossed a pokeball, releasing his fiery friend, Slugma.


I wasnt really sure with this sentence to be honest. Im PRETTY sure that pokeball is one word and not oen of those words you can treat your own little way but I could be wrong. I believe Slugma is an appositive of fiery friend so there should be a comma before it.


The forest was soon filled with thick smoke, and Mike couldn't see anything.


Remember, if the phrase after the coordinating conjuction (and,but) has a subject and verb, you need a comma before the coordinating conjuction.


"Ha-ha, Wooper use water gun on Torchic!" Bonnie followed up. Wooper found its way through the fog and nailed Torchic hard.

*sigh* missing period. (I am going to KILL Burnt Flower for makign me like this)

There were a few instances of periods instead of commas at the end of dialogues at the wrong time as well. I'm getting too exhausted to go back and qoute them.


Sorry I keep using all those crazy terms, but you're what, 21?, so it probably isnt so horrible for you. Then, again, I have this strong feeling that your not from an english speaking country



Alright, Im sorry but I just spent an hour on this review, and I cannot continue with the description and junk :( So heres just a quick chapter overview.


This chapter was pretty nice, not your best, but pretty good. Very humorous moments as well as nice battle scenes and the ending was very good, kinda reminded me of a action movie. Watch your grammar though! Although, Im being a huge hypocrite because one of my reviewers gives me reviews with over 4 pages of grammar mistake corrections! Very sorry about being so nitpicky this chapter. I was kinda dissapointed that he caught a TAILOW because those pokemon are so common in journey fics, but this Tailow is awesome (he pecks peoples heads!), so it all balances out.


Man, that was the longest review I have EVER written. 3 1/2 pages! Doesnt sound much, but try qouting/writing a 3 1/2 review and see how you feel. Now if you excuse me, I have got to write a nice long thank you letter to my reviewer who has 4+ page reviews....

Keep up the good work!

DANdotW
19th June 2005, 8:37 PM
Cool, these chapters are excellent too. I really enjoy reading these, they are great. Description, spelling and grammar are brilliant, I couldn't pick up any mistakes. This keeps me interested in Pokémon Fanfics along with ChaosMage's fic and writing myself. Keep up the good work,

HG

GoldenNoctowl77
19th June 2005, 8:49 PM
Bayleef Mistress- Thanks for taking the time to review. It's a nice welcome to see a new reader continue to review.

Indigestable_wad- Yeah, in the original version of chapter 7 Bonnie and Clyde were explained very thouroughly and I plan to broaden that even more. So in the next chapter you will learn of their intentions and why they are present a lot. In later chapters though I sometimes only mention them once and they have no impact on the chapter. They are not in every chapter. And yeah, thanks for the ought correction, spell check didn't get that one because it's not a real word really.

IceKing- Wow, very long read. LOL Let me make this apparent first I am 18 and live in the USA. I was born in the USA and English is my only language. It kind of hurt to hear you say I seemed like I wasn't from an English speaking country, but I'll get over it lol. I was in honor's english and AP english throughout High School and passed the AP English College Board tests with 4's, so I'm not completely dimwitted with English. The only reason this fic isn't torn apart like you did for me by myself is because it is just that, a fan fiction. I am not gaining anything by writing it except personal enjoyment. I try hard to make sure I correct mistakes and I welcome your critisizm. I want to know what I messed up in the fic so it can become less evident during later chapters. However, I don't bust my butt searching for them because again, I'm not gaining anything from it. These imperfections in grammar rarely if ever hinder the ability to read the fic. It still flows and people still get the gist of what is going on. Now if this was being published or for college purposes, I would tear it apart for errors, but frankly, I don't have that much time on my hands. And yeah, Mike has flaws now. I took that into consideration when you told me. As for him being a girly-man, I disagree. I am completely obsessed with keeping my appearence up and my weight down. I also like to look good, it makes me feel better, and if someone doesn't try to look impressive, it does sort of draw me away. I am not a femine person really and I've seen many guys that like to do the same. Mike just likes to nitpick on people's flaws, including himself, he's not in any way gay about it. LOL As for his crush on Amanda, I thought it was apparent to everyone from chapter 1 that he felt at least something for her. LOL

Anyways, I have to cut this short because I have to go to work. Thanks for the review and I will keep everything you said in mind. I'm glad you like my fic and I am in no way trying to insult you with my reply. I simply am defending myself while welcoming what you have to say. Please inform me when your fic is ready for reading, I will get right on it when it does.

Hunting Gaurd- Thanks for reviewing and I'm glad to see that my fic keeps you interested in fanfiction. I will get around to reading yours very soon, I promise, but for now, it's off to work I go.

Nagashi
19th June 2005, 11:57 PM
Hey, this is pretty cool so far. Apart from Mike seeming sue-ish (I'm guesing the weight problem wasn't in the first version, because here it seems forced) I'm liking this. Keep up the good work. Is this on FFnet? Because if it is could you link me so I can put it on story alert?

GoldenNoctowl77
20th June 2005, 3:03 AM
P-Arts: wow, a new reader! Thanks for taking the time to review my fic! Yeah, Mike's obsession with appearance was not in the original version, I just gave him a flaw that I too shared. Everyone seems to think that it makes him come across as gay, but I don't at all. Look at my above post to see my reasons. Search for Knowledge is not on FF.net but I will be sure to PM you whenever a new chapter is up, which should be daily until I'm caught up, so please check back.

Lucent Latias- Ha, you've had a lot of computer problems lately huh? And you still pull at it to get to my fic, what determination :p. The funny thing is that I wrote this chapter before I saw the 4th movie, so I really didn't have any idea that they were similar until after. That section was in the original version, only less detail involved. LOL. Yeah, Iceking went all out with that didn't he? LOL. Thanks for reading!

FlamingRuby
20th June 2005, 3:29 AM
Apologies for the delay, but I just now got around to Chapter 5...been busy with my own work.

Jeff is a riot, as always...and one question: do the characters name their Pokemon?

GoldenNoctowl77
20th June 2005, 5:08 PM
Hey guys, just continuing with another remake chapter. Things start to get a little original here as Mike and co make it to the Hoenn Archipelago and we get the backstories of Bonnie and Clyde. It also explains the basis of the plot which revolves around the mission Bonnie and Clyde were given. Happy reading, this one took a while to rewrite.

Chapter 7: The Road to the Hoenn Archipelago! Intentions Revealed!

Jeff awoke during the twilight hours of the night with a raging headache. It was still dark outside; the encompassing moon above sending light through their stay room’s porthole window. Shadows reflected against the opposing wall taking odd shapes. Jeff got the feeling that he was up this early partly because he had slipped into the dream world at six in the afternoon the day before. His hair was standing in all directions due to the plump pillow that came with the bed. His eyes were droopy and he began to rub them, trying hard to become completely coherent.

The teen slowly sat up pushing his covers down toward his feet. He noticed that Mike and Amanda were still fast asleep in the beds that ran parallel to his on each side. The ferry was rocking lightly and Jeff remembered how much he hated the sea. The rolling motion of the ocean crests against a boat put distant memories into his head that he did not want to remember.

As a child the age of five, Jeff received a rocking horse. He was so overjoyed with his new toy but had no idea how to use it. The young boy would mount his wooden steed and push forward and back, causing it to sway. It was at the lowest point of the rocking that little Jeffrey would topple backward over the horse’s rear end and hit the ground hard. After ten consecutive tries, several bumps and bruises, and an agitated mood, tiny Jeffrey decided that rocking was dumb, and he would never like it again.

Present Jeff agreed with his inner child, and a billowing boat brought back these oblique memories.

“I need some fresh air,” Jeff said to himself and took to a standing position next to his bed. The door across the room seemed so far away, and the fact that the floor below him was slanting in different directions every few seconds was no help. He thought about taking the easy way out and just plopping back into bed, but he was starting to get sea sick. The young adult tip toed along the floorboards and to the door, clawing at the knob to push it open. He literally toppled forward into the hallway, hitting his head against the wall on the opposite side. No other human being would have this much trouble with the barely noticeable waves, but Jeff was no average person.

The teen made his way along the hall, noticing a dining cart parked just outside of a nearby passenger’s room.

“What looks good?” Jeff asked himself as he pried the metallic tops from the entrees.

"You there, boy! That is not for you, get away!" a funny looking man with a large mustache said coming around a corner at the end of the hallway. The man grabbed the cart and pushed Jeff away before trotting irritatingly off with the cart in front of him. Drool trickled down the teen’s lengthy face as his expected dinner rolled away.

"Humph, nice people here," Jeff yelled toward the man and then headed for the stairs behind him. He clumsily ascended the steps and opened the door at the top, striding onto the deck of the ferry and into the night air. It was a nice night with a light breeze blowing. The deck was lit up by the moon above. A few "night owls" were strolling along the banister and looking down at the ocean below. Jeff walked to the edge of the ferry and peered over, trying to determine what was so interesting. After a few moments of viewing stupid waves as they crashed against the ship’s underside, he turned to the nearest couple, a rich looking man and woman, the latter holding a pink umbrella.

“Why are you two looking down for so long? Waves are not interesting. They are stupid. If you really care to know, all I think of when I see them is a fat person undulating their belly rolls while smearing jelly-filled donuts onto their mouth. Nice thought, huh?” He riposted with an awkward smile. The couple gave him very unpleasant glances before ambling away.

"Hello there mate!" Jeff heard the familiar voice of Greg resonating behind him.

"Hey Greg," Jeff greeted the man with a monotonous voice that clearly demonstrated that he was annoyed. The sailor was way to friendly, and Jeff knew it was only because he found Amanda to be a piece of ***. It was so bothersome to see a twenty year old with scruffy brown hair sporting a stupid sailor hat gawking at his friend. This was the most bizarre instance ever. Jeff, the master of annoyance, found another human being irritating!

"So what brings you out here at this time of night mate?" Greg inquired trying to make conversation.

“Please don’t call me mate. It sounds like we’re in the process of making babies or having relations,” Jeff requested as he leaned on the railing of the ferry.

“You’re so peculiar,” Greg said placing his fingers against his fuzzy chin.

“That better not be a come on,” Jeff said with a threatening glance. “Anyways, if you really want to know, the only reason I am up here is because I am not tired.”

The teen was already bored of the sailor and wanted a chance to make his exit.

Greg didn‘t allow it. Instead, he placed his broad arms around the kid and smiled.

"Thought you wouldn't, seeing as how you slept as soon as you boarded,” he remarked.

“I swear to all that is holy, if you don’t remove that sweaty arm from my shoulders I will kill you where you stand!” Jeff shrieked with eyes as wide as the sea that they traveled on.

“Whatever mate,” Greg said backing off. “If you're bored though, we could always have a match at the ship’s battlefield."

FINALLY! Greg had made a request that Jeff found worthwhile. He had been itching for a battle ever since Oldale Town, and beating the hell out of Greg would give him all the satisfaction he needed in a lifetime.

“You’re on! Lead the way,” he answered. Greg nodded and escorted the teen to the stern of the ship where a large battle ring was spread out along the deck.

“Prepare to lose mate,” Jeff said with a smirk.

~~~~~~~~~~~

Team Steam was now pursuing the ferry in a small gray submarine. Bonnie saw the kid board the vessel and immediately sent for the sturdy vehicle from Aqua’s base of operations.

"It really pays to have an Aqua member with you! You'll never have to worry about sea transportation!" Clyde said with a grin. Bonnie shot him a look then turned back to the telescope that she was peering into.

"You do realize why we are following these kids, don't you?" she asked her counterpart. Clyde shook his head and gave a puzzled look.

"Something about a shrine and a boy…oh and there was a remark about me getting my butt into the sub before you cut it off and feed it to a Ursaring," Clyde commented. Bonnie sighed and placed her chin in her cupped hand. Archie had made it clear that he needed her on this assignment, but she was beginning to wonder if it was worth it.

The Aqua grunt began to twirl her blonde hair and thought back to simpler times before this whole ordeal.

She started out as a well-educated girl from Mossdeep City with a great love for the sea. She worked hard to earn a job at the local Space Museum, but was sadly shot down and overshadowed by a brunette with big…“ambitions.” Actually, the woman just had a really nice rack, but Bonnie was not about to make her own chest look less appealing by saying that was the reason she didn’t get the job.

She had looked frantically for a job her whole first summer out of college, but found nothing. It was then that she had a run-in with a small Team Aqua regiment, a secret organization that was scouting her city for the location of Kyogre. This massive Pokemon was described to her as whale-like and legendary, and was said to fill the world with water with each bellow of its mighty voice. With this in mind, Bonnie joined the ranks of Team Aqua hoping to aid in supplying the world with precious seas.

She was a grunt for years, until Archie, the short, bearded leader of Team Aqua approached her with a proposition. Her boss was a stubborn person, sporting all black daily and a blue bandana across his forehead. His dark eyes were always serious and seemed pained at times. He was a fickle man and very hard to read. He had told her that if she accomplished this task he would make her an executive. She was very intrigued, and instantly decided to hear her boss out.

(What follows is the exact conversation between Bonnie and Archie in her stay room at Aqua headquarters, filled with extreme detail that Bonnie remembered so vividly)

“My friend, it is an understatement to say that times have changed. As the leader of Team Aqua, I have ultimately chosen to end the feud that we share with Team Magma so that our teams can focus on a far more desirable motive. Recently, I have been approached by a person of great importance. With his concerns, it has become apparent that our team alone can no longer guarantee the success of our mission. But with him, we might have a chance,” Archie said and paused, waiting to hear a response from the grunt that he never met before this moment.

“This is remarkable news that you bring,” Bonnie had replied not knowing what else to say. Her boss nodded and turned to look out the window of her apartment.

“There is a rumor growing that speaks of a Pokemon from space more powerful than any alive, even Kyogre. My friend has stated that Team Aqua and Magma must join as one with his team in order to claim this being. He is our leader now, and he claims that if we harness the power of this Pokemon, the world would be ours to toy with; shape to our will. He had this Pokemon within his grasp years ago, but he was betrayed, and the person who turned on him sealed the powerful creature away,” Archie paused once more to catch his breath. “For years he searched for the spot that his top scientist had hidden the Pokemon, and discovered a shrine in the Hoenn Archipelago that holds the prodigy inside. However, it was sealed away and none of us are able to crack the lock. It has been discovered that only a person of this scientist’s bloodline can open the grip that was placed on the Pokemon.”

“And what do I have to do with this?” Bonnie inquired.

“You, my beautiful grunt, must team up with a Magma peon and find the betrayer’s son. Then you must lead him to the shrine in Traven City, the capitol of the Hoenn Archipelago. We will handle the rest,” Archie explained.

“And how will I know where to look?” Bonnie said standing up and pacing across the room.

“This is the boy you’re looking for,” Archie held up a blurry photo of a young teen with spiky black hair, the son of his master’s head scientist, the young Mike Strateri. “His last known residence was Bayside City. I will send you there to find him. If you succeed in this mission, you will be made a top executive in the new order. It is almost time, when this Pokemon is awakened we will be ready,” Archie grinned devilishly.

“For what?” Bonnie asked.

“It is of no concern to you yet,” Archie retorted. With that, he walked out of the room leaving Bonnie to take in the assignment that was given to her.

(end conversation)

Bonnie had met Clyde hours after that discussion and the two soon found themselves on the shores of Bayside City. They searched high and low for the young teen, but discovered that he had left for Hoenn after graduating from Pokemon Tech. They informed their leaders of this, and were told to head to Hoenn to find the punk kid that eluded them.

Her flashback ended and she came back to reality, looking around the sub and letting out a yawn. She knew she could've done this alone, but Archie had told her that Maxie, the red-headed leader of the former Team Magma, insisted that one of his grunts aid her in this mission. She didn't like it at first, but the grunt she was paired with wasn't too bad.

On their way to Hoenn they had held many conversations and discovered that they shared similar interests. The Magma grunt was actually a relief from the extreme dullness of Bonnie’s search. He even came up with the name Team Steam to describe the merger of the two.

As they tracked this Mike Strateri, Clyde would tell her stories of his earlier career in a different team; one called Team Rocket. He explained that they stole Pokemon from trainers and were handsomely rewarded for it. Bonnie was very intrigued by this, and after some time stealing Pokemon became an "on the side" hobby for them. She stopped reminiscing with herself at this and turned to her counterpart.

"This kid has to be the one," she stated. Clyde nodded in agreement but knew little of what she was referring to. He vaguely recalled Maxie’s explanation of his mission, but the rest of his thoughts were occupied by dancing bananas and random scantly clad women. Maxie was not a patient man, and it had been a job and a half to get Clyde to understand the importance of this ordeal. Everything about it sounded far fetched to Clyde, but he agreed without hesitation when the word “executive” was uttered.

“So what are you planning to do as an executive?” he then spoke up, his red hood scrunching at the neckline as he propped his head back.

“My friend, I will bring our little alliance to the top of the world,” Bonnie responded with a smirk…

~~~~~~~~~~~

On the back of the ship, Greg and Jeff had each taken their opposing sides on the battlefield. The moon lit up the arena like a spotlight. Jeff noticed some coiled ropes and wood that he could use as defenses in his match.

"Go Treecko!" the teen shouted as his Pokeball hit the deck and the small green gecko appeared.

"I choose you Seel!" Greg said. In a flash of red light a little white Pokemon formed. Its face resembled a pug and it had a tiny horn on the top of its head. This new Pokemon clapped and stuck its tongue out as it appeared.

"Nice Seel!" Jeff commented. "Treecko, use pound!" The Pokemon nodded and raced towards Seel.

"Seel, dodge and use head butt!" Greg commanded. Seel did as ordered, rolling elegantly out of the charging Treecko’s way with the grace of a swan. Treecko sailed by and stumbled to turn around when it was hit hard in the back by a pointy horn.

"Forgot to mention, I'm a Pokemon Contest buff. My Pokemon show off as they battle!" Greg remarked. Jeff sighed.

"Wow, well then it shouldn't be too hard to defeat them. Treecko, use absorb!" Jeff yelled. Greg shot Jeff a look, and then ordered Seel to dodge the new attack. Treecko stood its ground as a greenish ball of energy flew from its body and engulfed Seel. The white Pokemon cried out and slumped onto the deck, convulsing with pain as the foreign liquid ran through its torso and sapped away its needed energy. The ball then slipped out of the Pokemon and slithered back to Treecko, entering it and placing Seel’s energy inside to revitalize it.

"Not to shabby!" Greg said with a grin. "Seel, use aurora beam!" Seel's horn began to sparkle many colors and it shot off the attack. Treecko rolled to the side, trying to get behind the wooden planking, but its tail was caught in the attack and it was dragged back some ways.

"Did some damage, but not enough!" Jeff smirked. "Treecko, try a quick attack!" Treecko nodded and raced towards Seel.

"Seel, use surf!" Greg roared. The Pokemon clapped, then dove off the side of the ferry disappearing underneath the rolling waves with a splash.

"What the hell, you Pokemon just committed suicide!" Jeff screamed in disbelief. Suddenly, Seel poked its head from the water and grinned. The ocean below it began to rise, growing up to the deck of the ship in a matter of seconds.

"Guess it's back from the dead!" Greg retorted. The large wave of sea water splashed onto the deck and slammed into Treecko, sending it sprawling to the ground.

"Now Seel, use ice beam!" Greg commanded.

“Seel Seel!” the Pokemon clapped as a frosty white beam formed at the tip of its horn. The shaft of cold energy flew across the field and hit Treecko hard, enveloping its whole body in an artic wind. The gecko’s temperature began to drop rapidly, and it didn’t help that the creature was cold blooded. The beam dispersed and Treecko stumbled before toppling forward and smashing its chin on the deck. It didn’t move a muscle.

"Treecko return!" Jeff yelled recalling the Pokemon. It was hard to see his new Pokemon lose to Greg’s, but he wasn’t going to end it this way. "Seedot, get in there!" he yelled as his playful little acorn emerged on deck. It jumped a few times and then began rolling around.

"Ha, this should be easy." Greg said confidently. "Seel, destroy it with an ice beam!" Seel nodded and released the glistening beam of ice towards Seedot.

"Seedot, dodge and use razor leaf!" Jeff shouted. Seedot jumped up as the attack hit the ground below it, covering it in a bed of ice. The Pokemon landed slipping wildly around. It quickly regained its footing and released the barrage of leaves. Seel dodged a few, but was blown back by the last bunch. Seedot jumped happily and began to roll around on the ice as the opposing Pokemon flopped unconscious on the deck .

"Seel return!" Greg shouted. "Go Lotad!" The new Pokemon formed on the deck and made a tiny spout to show off. It was a small blue…thing with a lily pad on its back and a big yellow beak. It resembled a bug-like duck.

"Seedot, razor leaf again!" Jeff shouted. The acorn let out the barrage of leaves towards the Lotad.

"Lotad, use mist!" Greg countered. The deck was soon shrouded in a fog, and Jeff couldn't tell where Lotad had gone to.

"Lotad, use astonish!" Greg shouted. The Pokemon leapt from the fog and battered Seedot, sending it flying in a scared frenzy from the surprising attack. Lotad then retreated back into the fog.

"This is dumb and unfair. Seedot, you better use harden," Jeff commented like a spoiled child while trying to see Greg’s stupid face through the thick smoke of the field. Seedot's coat glistened and it placed its footing, ready to take on another attack.

"Astonish again!" Greg shouted through the mist. Lotad leapt from the mist again and battered Seedot. It then retreated in the same manner. The tiny acorn didn’t budge much this time.

“We have to get it out of there!" Jeff panicked. "Seedot use bullet seed!" Seedot jumped happily and a storm of seeds began pouring into the mist. Greg dodged as the seeds pushed through the fog and landed near him. He began to worry as Lotad would have trouble dodging the pellets in the safety of its mist.

He was right to worry. His tiny duck Pokemon was freaking out inside its own fog trying to dodge the unseen seeds as they paraded through its fortress of mist. After a few moments, it leapt from the fog in a desperate attempt to see the items it was dodging.

"While it's out, use razor leaf!" Jeff commanded. Seedot released the attack and it bombarded Lotad. The tiny duck fell back and slowly got up.

“Water gun!” Greg ordered. His Pokemon sent a stream of water toward Seedot, but with its tiring spirit the water was too slow. Seedot simply spun like a top to dodge and then rolled straight into Lotad, sending the Pokemon tumbling backward with a dizzy expression. It didn’t move.

"Lotad return!" Greg said with a sigh. The Pokeball in his hand sent out a flash of red light and Lotad disappeared from the deck. The sun was now starting to appear over the horizon and the moon was nowhere to be seen.

"Tough match kid," Greg said to Jeff and placed out his hand for a handshake. Jeff nodded and petted Seedot, showing no signs of shaking the sweaty man’s hand. The Pokemon continued to spin like a top.

"Finally showing affection to your Pokemon Jeff?" the teen heard his friend Mike say. He turned to see the black-haired boy appear from the shadows of the deck. Taillow sat on his shoulder pecking away at his head.

"Uh, no!" Jeff said nervously and pushed Seedot over.

The ferry was now pulling into the harbor of the first island in the Hoenn Archipelago.

"According to the map, this is Burgundy City, the heart of Akbar Isle, right where Mr. Alabaster said we would start at," Amanda remarked joining her friends.

"Is there a gym here?" Mike asked taking another peck to the head from the tiny swallow. Amanda checked the map, looking intently at the legend and back to Burgundy City.

"Yep, and it looks like it’s a ground type trainer," she replied.

"Great, we'll head there then!" Mike suggested. There was no objections from his friends. Mike smiled excitedly. His first gym battle was soon to come…

Next Chapter- Chapter 8: Accused of Cheating! Jeff's Special Seedot!
Mike and co are on the way to the gym, but Jeff stops to battle a trainer. When the kid sees his Seedot using razor leaf, he accuses Jeff of cheating. How does Seedot know an attack is shouldn't? Find out in the next episode.

DANdotW
20th June 2005, 5:36 PM
Great chapter again. I love the battle between Jeff and Greg, it was awesome. I'm really enjoying this and am glad it is back, which is what I always say so...meh! Battles seem to be the only thing that interest me at then moment, probaly because I'm writing the Tournament Chronicles, but it's wired. Keep writing,

HG

Nagashi
20th June 2005, 6:02 PM
Aher cool chapter. Apart from the overuse of exclamation marks, I enjoyed this. Thanks for the read.

Sike Saner
20th June 2005, 6:03 PM
Ah, sorry I couldn't be here last time...Oh, but that just means I get to comment on two chapters instead of one!

Regarding Chapter 6:


"If one of those birds craps on me there will be hell to pay," Jeff snarled.

Yeah, I refuse to walk underneath birds. :p


"Are you kidding me? That guy practically jumped you, what do you think he'd do alone on a ship with a shockingly good looking guy like me?" Jeff answered running a hand through his hair.

Yep, time to throw the ol' shoe at our friend Jeff... :D

I will tell you this: Bonnie on fire was a great idea. Feel free to torch her anytime you please.

Regarding Chapter 7:


He vaguely recalled Maxie's explanation of his mission, but the rest of his thoughts were occupied by dancing bananas and random scantly clad women.

Gwen Stefani's "Hollaback Girl" had been stuck in my head until recently. And then I read that...


"This is dumb and unfair. Seedot, you better use harden," Jeff commented like a spoiled child while trying to see Greg's stupid face through the thick smoke of the field.

Excellent (not to mention very funny) third-person skills there, coloring the narration with Jeff's perspective. "Greg's stupid face", indeed. :p

I liked the background info on Team Steam, too.
Team Steam...Just so you know, in choosing that name, you've caused me to hear Peter Gabriel every time Bonnie and Clyde appear.

I look forward to the next chapter!

IceKing
20th June 2005, 7:33 PM
Noticed a few grammar mistakes but.. uh, IceKing killed them all. o_ o;; And their children..

I solemnly promise to never review your fic after proofreading my own GN77 :) Ill wait at least one hour in between so I get out of grammar checking mode

And also I dont really think of Mike as a girly man in the way your thinking, its just what I call guys who are obsessed with their appearance and/or weight (including myself :P). I dont really think their girly in anyway; be sure to tell Mike I said that!

Anyway, heres chapter sevens review WITH NO GRAMMAR CORRECTIONS!!!

Qoute Feedback


After ten consecutive tries, several bumps and bruises, and an agitated mood, tiny Jeffrey decided that rocking was dumb, and he would never like it again.


Looks like Jeff was a moron even as little Jeffrey. Man, I can hardly imagine him being a little kid.


This was the most bizarre instance ever. Jeff, the master of annoyance, found another human being irritating!

So Jeff found himself a rival in annoyance :) The Sailor Greg reminds me of a Greg in my fic whose twice as flirty.


“I swear to all that is holy, if you don’t remove that sweaty arm from my shoulders I will kill you where you stand!” Jeff shrieked with eyes as wide as the sea that they traveled on.


LOL. This and the whole mating business is just too hilarious. I wonder if Jeff calling the dude "mate" is a sign of AnnoyingShipping....(*sigh* Im not good with shipping, okay?)


It was a small blue…thing

BEST...DESCRIPTION...EVER



OKay, now that that's over its tiem for the real review. This chapter was clearly a Jeff centered one. To be honest I thought it could have used more humor and charachter development since it was a Jeff Centric chapter, but you put way more than enough of your share of humor and I suppose its kinda early for any major charachter developments. We also learned more about Team Steam's plans, im wondering if the pokemon in Rayquaza. The battle was pretty good, I liked the way Lotad hid in the mists and attacked from there. I was kinda expecting some funny comments from Jeff, but it seems he turns pretty serious when battling (unless, I forgot some lines,which I tend to do with my short term memory loss). I have a question, was it Greg who owned the Seel in the original version? Also, did they arrive in the city at the middle of the night? Hmm, it seems kind of early for a gym match but then again they did train their original pokes for a month at the center. Bleh, sorry this is such a sucky review, but Im still exhausted from yesterdays one. You're doing an excellent job, keep it up! I have to praise your style of writing, because it is so wonderful! It draws the reader in and keeps them in with its good qualities.

GoldenNoctowl77
20th June 2005, 7:45 PM
Hunting Gaurd- Yep, I tried to beef up the original version's battle and I think it came out well. Battles are fun to describe :) Thanks for reviewing.

P-Arts- Hey, thanks for becoming a consistant reader :) Yeah, there was a lot of exclamation points in this chapter but that's mostly because it was a battle. Battles usually involve loud shouting and such. Thanks again for reading :)

Sike Saner- Yep, you got to review two chapters with a lot of new humor. Thanks for keeping on the ball and I look forward to you next review.

IceKing- Ha, a reivew without pointing out grammar mistakes, it's a thing unheard of :o. Just kidding, while it's nice, I would have liked to have seen a bit of things pointed out to see how I improved, or didn't :p Yeah, Jeff's a pretty serious battler but in future chapters he gets less and less serious when battling. Yep, Greg owned the Seel in the original chapter, and as for arriving at night...


The sun was now starting to appear over the horizon and the moon was nowhere to be seen.

It was early morning when they arrived in both versions :p

And the next chapter isn't a gym battle. The next one is a big focus on Jeff, more than this one, with A LOT of humor and some character development as well.

Thanks for the reviews guys. The next chapter might be up late tonight.

indigestible_wad
20th June 2005, 10:21 PM
Plotty goodness! Well, not really, it only gave away so much. T'was a good chappy. But Jeff didn't have too much humor this time. We can also derive from this that he doesn't like people he doesn't know.

Twilight Absol
21st June 2005, 12:17 AM
sorry for not reviewing, i was busy on nb...
Very nice couple of chapters, the humor is great, and even though there's a few mistakes, nothing to freak out at. Jeff is practically running the show even though Mike is the main character. I would like to point out that Bonnie and CLyde are kind of getting repetitive, they are almost straightforward annoying like James and Jesse....

jirachiman876
21st June 2005, 2:35 AM
*gasps* Well I finally got to your request and I must say that jeff is rivaling greg from Whirl Island Quest. Anyway, great fic you've got here. The first couple of chapters except for the POkemon Tech was unoriginal but hey you made it your own with they way you described it all and stuff like that. NOw that's three people I know that have three friends (two guys and a girl) traveling together. Me IceKing and you. I found many mistakes in my excursion through the chapters but I never point them out if there is more than one page. Sorry about that. There was one thing that bugged the crap out of me. You used advise when you meant advice. I must now lecture on the difference.
Advise to a verb and is used when you are either reciving advice or giving advice. ie I advise you to use a little more description in same battles.
Advice is a noun that is used...as a noun. ie My advice is to put feeling into the Pokemon as they are abttling, tell me what they are feeling when they are getting hit.
Also, something that I'm now using, put in a little blood and stuff like that. Like if someone gets hit by a razor leaf, won't they get sliced by the sharp edges. What happens when you get a cut??? You bleed. You don't need to put a lot of blood but just a little. Heh you don't have to do that at all really, it's just a suggestion.
Well i hope to see more funnyness from greg and the stuff i mentioned in my examples. Yes they had a suggestion in each of them.
jirachiman out ;385;
PS: now waiting for your review. You really don't have to if you don't want to but hey, it's a good fic I think.

GoldenNoctowl77
21st June 2005, 4:24 AM
indigestable_wad- Yeah, I tried my best to get some of the plotline out without overly spoiling anything. If I gave anymore away then it would lose impact, and future chapters do enlighten the plot further. Thanks for the review, and expect a lot of Jeff humor in the next chapter.

Twilight Absol- Thanks for the review. Yep, I never expected Jeff to be this popular but he like owns the fic now. But you'll see that change when I started posting actual new chapters instead of rewrites. The humor starts to turn into very heart-hitting drama and Mike retakes the stage. There will still be a lot of humor, just not enough to call this a comedy fic.

jirachiman876- Thanks for finally getting to my fic. I think the advice advise thing was just a spelling error as I am perfectly aware of the difference. As for blood, I don't see that as a necesity in my fic. It's mature in a way, but I don't want to make it over the top. And yeah, you hope to see more funniness from Jeff, this is not Whirl Island Quest :p. I'll get around to your fic soon, but I have a lot of requests at the moment.

Lucent Latias- Another faithful reader and I'm glad to see you got your old computer back. Yep, Jeff is a very funny guy and I hope you like him even more in future chapters. Thanks for reviewing!

Joe-y
21st June 2005, 10:55 AM
*In a southern lady accent* Why I do believe you done gone made a fool of yourself! Sayin somethin like,

"The only reason this fic isn't torn apart like you did for me by myself is because it is just that, a fan fiction. I am not gaining anything by writing it except personal enjoyment."

Is just plain silly, and you done gone made the lord cry. Why everyone knows writing anything down helps improve ones hand eye coordi- coordi? That thing we use to make things look down right pretty.

/Southern Lady voice

Actually, saying you gain nothing from this is silly, your skill as a writer is still increasing from writing. You could just write the word 'personification' over and over and your typing (or writing) ability would increase. And proof reading is something you must PRACTICE PRACTICE PRACTICE. It is one of the most essential skills a writer can ever have.

Enough with that, onto the review

Your scentence flow is sometimes disrupted by an occasional bad word, or something misplaced or not needed. Instead of more words to describe something, use better words to describe everything.

Chapter 1 - Was by far the lowest point, it had cliched scentences, and a lack of love =(

You've already been told of grammatical errors.

Chapter 2 - MUCH better than the first.

After chapter 2, things began to get progressively better. Each chapter was better then the one before it.

Your action sequences aren't bad, but they could use some working on. And MY GOD MAN! YOU BROKE THE 4TH WALL! EXISTENCE AS WE KNOW IT IS OVER! (Kudos to those who know what the 4th wall is)

You've had a few good moments of description, nice.

Aside from the first chapter, your story is fun to read, and enticing, although I wouldn't mind seeing jack knocked down a few pegs. Try having someone confuse him for an actual nosepass, or have a group of nosepass think he's a nosepass. ...God I hate you nosepass, you're the worst idea for a pokemon ever.

GoldenNoctowl77
22nd June 2005, 3:22 AM
Chapter 8: Accused of Cheating! Jeff's Special Seedot!
Hey, here's the eighth remake chapter coming to you from my new laptop. I didn't have as much time to edit this one as the others but I thought it was good enough to release, just keep in mind that there may be a little bit of grammatical errors and such until I get around to proofreading it fully. Enjoy!

Chapter 8: Accused of Cheating! Jeff's Special Seedot!

The large red and black ferry was now docked in the Burgundy City harbor. It was very early morning and the sun had just appeared over the horizon, giving the skyline of the city a reddish hue. The boarding ramp lowered onto the docks to allow the passengers to get off the vessel. Greg led his new friends down it and onto the busy pier. Assorted sailors and merchants were already setting up shops and preparing for a day’s work. Fisherman hoisted their anchors from the sea and began to speed away from the harbor, their boat’s creating tiny wakes as they disappeared into the ocean fog.

“So…where are you three heading off to?” Greg asked the group without moving his beady eyes from Amanda.

“Anywhere you aren’t going,” Jeff replied folding his arms in a tiring manner.

“Actually, we’re going toward the Burgundy City Gym. I’m planning on having my first official gym battle this morning,” Mike corrected his friend. While he too did not like Greg’s apparent obsessive vibe for Amanda, he didn’t want to be rude to the polite, yet sweaty man.

“What about you?” Amanda inquired Greg.

“Me? I’m going to do some errands here and then I'm heading for Sandstone City. It’s an elegant place on the other side of the island. It’s holding a Pokemon Contest next week,” Greg informed the group. Amanda heard this and instantly leapt toward Mike. She grabbed his shoulder and began to pull it hard.

"Pokemon Contests! Mike, as soon as your gym battle is over, we're heading there!" she shrieked while practically bouncing in the air.

"Wow, you're into contests too?" Greg asked with a Gengar’s grin.

Amanda nodded and placed her hands behind her neck. "I love Pokemon Contests. It's such a great feeling to train your best friends to look beautiful!" she laughed. Greg nodded in utter agreement.

“Hey Rhyhorny, keep your Ekans in its pants, ok? I can tell by that grin you just want to-” Jeff started to say before he was once again silenced by a smack in the face.

“You are so juvenile!” Amanda responded with an angered look.

“I’d like to see your Pokemon,” Greg said changing the subject.

“I bet you would! And by Pokemon you mean her-”

“JEFF!” Amanda silenced him with a shrieking voice. The annoyed girl then pulled two Pokeballs from her pack and tossed them onto the wooden planks of the dock. Ralts and Mudkip appeared, each one looking around confused.

“I haven’t had much time to train Mudkip, but I did brush it last night,” Amanda admitted. Mudkip waddled up to her leg and began to rub against it. She picked the Pokemon up and began to tickle its stomach. Ralts peered up at the bulky sailor towering over it. It seemed rather frightened and wobbled backward, tripping on its own ghostly feet as it did.

"Ralts is my little smarty. It helped me pass my Pokemon Contest class at Pokemon Tech," Amanda informed Greg.

"They look perfect!" Greg replied while staring at the Pokemon’s trainer.

“By ‘they’, do you mean the Pokemon or the other two objects Amanda has?” Jeff asked sarcastically.

"I‘m just going to head out now. This situation is becoming far too awkward. Hope to see you all later, well, most of you," Greg said as he stepped away and glared at Jeff. With that, he turned and walked down the pier. Mike smiled as the man finally exited their lives. He was a nice guy, but his fixation on Amanda was something Mike wouldn’t have tolerated much longer. He would have opened his mouth just as Jeff had in a few more minutes with the sailor.

"Well, should we be off too?" Mike asked his friends. Amanda nodded and picked Ralts up as well. Both Pokemon rested in her arms as she began to cradle them.

"Dude, if you baby your Pokemon like that they‘ll just become pansies. You need to give them tough love like I do with Seedot," Jeff muttered. Amanda shot him a very dirty look and turned away. The three then exited the dock and into the lively city streets. It was heavily populated, but there were surprisingly no cars on the road. Transportation consisted of biking and walking, which many people were doing. Assorted vendors and shops lined the sidewalks opening up for the morning rush. Office buildings and skyscrapers towered in the distance behind them.

"The gym isn't too far ahead. We just have to pass through Burgundy Park," Amanda informed them while studying at the map. Mike nodded and pressed on.

The three soon came to a large, concrete archway with a bricked fence extending away from it and around the perimeter of a healthy green field. Different types of palm trees and assorted foliage lined the interior throughout the haven. This was Burgundy Park, a place for trainers to come and relax. The group headed underneath the archway and into the field, passing by many trainers who were enjoying the crisp morning air.

"Hmm, is anybody getting hungry? We could take a tiny break here if so,” Amanda suggested. Mike sighed a bit but did not want to go against Amanda’s wishes.

“Sounds good. I could use some relaxation before my battle,” he said.

“I guess I could take a little nap,” Jeff remarked and walked toward a nearby oak tree with a large bumpy trunk.

“Jeff, how can you sleep when we’re in such a beautiful area?” Amanda wondered with a shocked tone.

“Aww, look at the cute little flower!” Jeff said with a caring whisper. He bent down and began to pet a tiny dandelion that was poking up from the grass near the tree, looking up at Amanda to see if she was satisfied.

“Whatever,” she said placing a hand up.

“Now if you’ll excuse me, I need my beauty sleep,” Jeff said to her. He then turned around and sat down, crushing the flower under his lanky body.

"Taillow, Torchic, Electrike, come on out!" Mike exclaimed while tossing their Pokeballs into the air. The three Pokemon appeared instantly. Taillow immediately landed on Mike's shoulders and began pecking away at his head.

"Ow, Taillow, don't you realize that hurts?" the teen yelled. Torchic began to run around the field as Electrike tugged at Mike's pant leg.

"Seedot, Treecko, let’s go!" Jeff yelled tossing his two Pokeballs as well. The two Pokemon formed and blinked. Treecko sat down next to Jeff, making sure it didn't seem obvious it wanted to be near him. Seedot happily rolled around the field.

Mike had decided to take this time to train before his gym match. He was going to need it seeing as how his two other Pokemon were not experienced battlers.

"Ok guys, we're going to practice some techniques. We'll try accuracy first," Mike announced to his three creatures. He leaned down and placed his pack on the grass, pulling a neon green Frisbee out. "Taillow, when I throw the Frisbee, I want you to wing attack it," he ordered. Taillow pecked hard at his head and then nodded.

Mike tossed the Frisbee into the air and the bird took flight. It swooped low and swung up, striking the disk and knocking it down to the ground below.

"Good job buddy!" Mike complimented his feathery friend. "Now bring it back!" Taillow chirped and flew down to retrieve the fallen Frisbee. It grasped it in its small talons and began to fly off across the park.

"Taillow, what the hell are you doing? Get back here so we can train!” Mike yelled as he raced after the thieving Pokemon. Electrike growled happily and followed its master with Torchic close behind.

Amanda was lying on the grass looking up at the sky. Her two Pokemon were playing a clapping game by her side. She sat up and peered at them.

"You guys ready to practice some contest skills?" She suggested. They nodded and she turned to Jeff.

"Aren't you going to train?" she asked him. Jeff lounged with his head against the tree and a baseball cap from his pack over his face.

"Do I have too?" he muttered from under it, his voice muffled and whiney.

“Of course! If you want to be a half decent trainer you have to work at it,” Amanda responded and stood up as Jeff removed the hat.

"You two!” he shouted to his two grass types. “Fight to the death."

With this command, he laid back down. Treecko looked at Seedot, and the spinning Pokemon glared back. They angrily began to sidestep in a circle growling at each other. Amanda shrugged and walked off.

"Excuse me, but are those your Pokemon?" a girl's voice sounded.

“For the last time Amanda. My Pokemon are training, go find some random guy to flirt with,” Jeff said as he removed the hat again, but was now face to face with a young trainer. She had glowing blonde hair and a short skirt on. A white sweater modestly covered her chest and bows were at the peak of her hairline.

“Um, yeah they are mine,” Jeff replied weakly. He turned to his Pokemon to see Treecko was prodding Seedot with a stick, trying hard to puncture the Pokemon’s thick shell.

"Wow, they are so cute!" the girl said with a smile.

"Ugh, doesn't anyone care that I'm trying to sleep?" Jeff muttered to himself. He began to whimper as the girl continued the one-sided conversation.

"The name's Laura, fancy a match?" she asked.

"Fine, if it'll get you to stop bothering me," Jeff retorted as he stood up.

"Yay!" Laura giggled as she ran to the far end of the field.

“God, why are women so confusing? If they aren’t complaining about oppression and unfair treatment, then they are giggly and ecstatic,” Jeff thought to himself.

"Go Marill!" Laura shouted as a royal blue Pokemon took shape in front of her. It was very round and had a zigzagging tail that ended with an orb at the tip. Its ears were circular and wiggly and it had teddy bear eyes.

"Seedot, I guess you can go out there!" Jeff said yawning. The acorn spun into battle.

Meanwhile, Mike had finally caught up to Taillow. He leapt up and snagged the Frisbee from the bird, which retaliated by pecking furiously at his head.

"Electrike, we're going to work on your quick attack as electric attacks will do no good against this gym leader," Mike turned to his starter Pokemon. Electrike nodded and Mike threw the Frisbee. The Pokemon barked and ran after it, pumping its legs with volts of electricity. It leapt into the air and smashed into the Frisbee, sending it sprawling to the ground.

"Good job dude!" Mike yelled. Electrike landed next to the disc and started to bite at it, the happy growling morphing to anger.

"No, Electrike, you're done!' Mike shrieked as he pulled the Frisbee away from the snarling Pokemon. The circular toy was now was full of bite marks and scratches

"Torchic, you're up. Please be gentle with my things," Mike exclaimed and glared at Electrike. Torchic nodded and Mike tossed the Frisbee. The baby chicken let out a barrage of embers, charring the Frisbee, and causing Mike to jump away as the disc landed scorching on the ground next to him.

“Nice aim Torchic, but I said to treat the Frisbee with kindness,” Mike riposted with a disappointed look.

Team Steam had entered the park through the west entrance and were now causally parading through the trainers and Pokemon.

"So many Pokemon, this place would be a Team Rocket gold mine," Clyde grinned.

"Yeah, and there’s that chick that hangs out with our prodigy," Bonnie discovered. She pointed down the park to where Amanda stood training her Pokemon. "We’ve found them again, and lucky us…there’s only one of them. Fancy a Ralts and a Mudkip?" she asked her partner. Clyde let out a devilish grin and nodded in understanding.

"Mudkip, use water gun!" Amanda ordered. Mudkip let loose the fountain of water straight into the air while doing a jig on its hind legs. “Your cuteness is splendid! Now try a mud slap!" Amanda instructed. Mudkip nodded and switched attacks. It began to happily kick up mud that had formed from the sprinkles of water trickling to the ground from the previous attack. Amanda began to laugh.

"You’re the perfect cute contest competitor!" she excitedly exclaimed. "Now Ralts, how's your smartness coming along?"

Ralts grinned and waved to her. It was practicing its calm mind/confusion combo and it was going smoothly.

Suddenly, the Pokemon disappeared in a flash of brown cloth. Amanda turned and saw Mudkip get snatched up as well.

"What's this?" she asked looking out to see Bonnie and Clyde with sacks over their shoulders. Each bag contained one of Amanda’s precious Pokemon.

“Well, we were strolling through the park one day,” Bonnie grinned and turned to look at Clyde.

“In the merry merry month of May,” he finished the sentence.

“And we thought, why not take the little skank’s Pokemon? Isn’t that lovely, Clyde thought of it!” Bonnie clarified.

~~~~~~~~~~~

"Marill, tackle it!" Laura yelled. The round Pokemon nodded and raced towards the tiring Seedot. The battle had been going on a while, and Seedot was almost out.

"Seedot, roll out of the way! Don’t let that beach ball topple over you! It would be Fat Tuesday all over again!" Jeff yelled recalling the day at Pokemon Tech when a fat student steamrolled over his tiny seedling Pokemon to grab a fallen donut.

Seedot spun to the left and dodged the attack. It then happily leapt up and down not seeming to have a care in the world.

"Now use razor leaf!" Jeff instructed. Seedot let off the attack, but Laura picked up her Marill before it connected.

"What is this? How the heck does your Seedot know razor leaf?" she asked in a distasteful manner.

"Um, the same way you know how to shut up. I ordered the attack the first day I got the Pokemon, and it performed it.” Jeff released the comment with a pleasing glance. “Why, is it bad that it knows it?”

"You’re a little cheater! Seedots don't learn razor leaf. I don't battle cheaters!" Laura angrily bellowed and stormed off.

"Huh? Seedot you nitwit! What's wrong with you?" Jeff yelled. Seedot stared at him then proceeded to roll around on the ground. “Leave it to me to get the deformed starter…” Jeff said with a sigh.

"Electrike, keep dodging!" Mike coached his beginner. All of his Pokemon were now dodging each other with awesome timing.

"Get back here!" Mike heard Amanda yell. He turned to see Team Steam carrying two large sacks as his friend angrily chased.

"Don't they learn?" Mike sighed and stepped in front of him as the two approached.

"Out of our way kid!" Bonnie roared, but Mike stood his ground.

"Go Slugma!” Clyde barked and released his sizzling Pokemon.

“Wooper, I choose you!" Bonnie followed suit. Mike signaled to his Pokemon and they leapt in front of him.

"Time for some real practice!" he grinned.

Jeff had recently left the nerve-wracking park and began to wander through the city. He was a man on a mission, and that mission was to discover the birth defect that his starter had. Seedot and Treecko followed quaintly behind him as they moved through the crowds of people.

"You would think there would be a decent amount of video phones around here!" Jeff said sarcastically to anyone that would listen. The Pokecenter was just up the road against a large office building. Jeff walked inside and marched up to the front desk. Nurse Joy stared back at him with big blue eyes.

"Nurse Joy, I need your help!" he stated and then gave her a confused look.

“Did you get fired from the Oldale center and come here?" he inquired.

“No, I’m afraid that I have always been here,” The nurse retorted with a bewildering tone.

“Um, I’m just going to skip a lot of time and just realize that I’m high,” Jeff muttered. “But when did I drink enough cough medicine to do that? Maybe I got sick on the ship and passed out and Amanda gave me too much cough medicine in which case I didn‘t realize it until after we docked.”

“Is there anything I can help you with?” Joy said trying to change the subject.

"It's my Seedot. Some girl I battled said it cheats. I think it has a disease or something," Jeff explained while in the midst of his epiphany. Nurse Joy looked down to see the smiling acorn Pokemon at Jeff‘s feet.

"Looks perfectly fine to me," she shrugged with no words of wisdom to offer.

"Yeah, but the girl said it can't learn razor leaf, but it uses it anyways. Is that bad?" Jeff asked with a dumbfounded expression. Nurse Joy laughed.

"I don't think so. Maybe you're just a good trainer," she suggested.

“God, I know I’m hot but why does everyone insist on trying to get in my pants?” Jeff said looking down and talking to Seedot. “Come on, this horn dog isn’t going to help much. Let’s call up Pokemon Tech.”

Jeff sighed and walked to the video phone at the desks across the counter. Though he didn't want to call, only Mr. Farkin could clear this up, so he would have to hold a conversation with the dispiriting man. The phone rang three times before the teacher picked up.

"Jeff? Why how is my mentally challenged pupil?" his teacher said with a serious tone. Mr. Farkin liked to hit it to his students, and Jeff got a lot of the punches.

"Uh, let me be frank Mr. Farkin." he began while trying his best to keep his cool. It wasn’t easy as Mr. Farkin’s beady eyes stared at him through large spectacles on the monitor.

"Why the hell does my Seedot know razor leaf?" he then shouted at the top of his lungs causing the guests of the Center to look on with shock. Mr. Farkin stared at him with owl-like eyes.

"Hmm, ah yes I remember!" the teacher stammered. "Mr. Leaof, the grass type teacher, was the one who caught it. He was shocked as well by this. It seems your Seedot is one of a kind, the only one of its species that mastered the attack. Mr. Leaof wanted to research it more, but Principal Plap wanted all caught Pokemon in the selection section. I guess you were the lucky trainer that got the special Pokemon,"

"So I'm special?" Jeff let out a toothy grin. He knew it! Not only was he hot as hell, but he was now extraordinary! The thought of being better then Mike and Amanda crossed his mind.

"No, But your Seedot is! The only special you belong to is special education," Mr. Farkin replied with a laugh that shattered Jeff’s intoxicating happiness. The young teen toppled over and smashed his face into the video phone, causing the teacher to fall back in his chair.

"Well, have to go, got a class!" Mr. Farkin said speedily and hung up.

Jeff stood up and stared at Seedot. It was blinking a lot as it peered up at its trainer, wondering what had just gone on.

"I heard what your teacher said,” Jeff heard Laura’s voice behind him. “Sorry I was mean earlier, I was just shocked by your Seedot knowing that attack.”

"You should be! Next time you decide to go all ‘PMS monster’, make sure it’s not on me! And to make it up to my hot self, I want a rematch!" Jeff retorted.

Laura looked up with mixed expressions. She found it rude that he mentioned a woman’s monthly visitor in her presence, but also enjoyed the fact that he wanted a rematch. She decided to let the last comment slide.

"You're on!" she said with a grin.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"Taillow wing attack!" Mike muttered. The Pokemon flew down and bashed into Wooper, sending it tumbling back.

“Slugma, try a yawn!" Clyde roared. Slugma let out a low yawn and soon Taillow fluttered to the ground with drooping eyes. A small bubble erupted from its nostril and Mike knew it was asleep.

"Return!" He shouted.

"Ooh, put them all to sleep!" Bonnie said excited by the Pokemon’s ability.

"Electrike, use spark!" Mike instructed. The Pokemon let off the attack, but Wooper leapt in the way, taking the electricity in and allowing it to pass into the ground under it, leaving both Pokemon unharmed.

"Yawn," Clyde repeated to his Pokemon. Slugma opened its mouth again, and Electrike was snoring like a baby in no time flat.

"Return!" Mike said recalling the electric Pokemon to its Pokeball. Now only Torchic remained. "Torchic, use ember!” Torchic let off the barrage of fireballs, but Wooper just took this attack as well, seemingly unfazed by it.

"Ha-ha, what a weakling!" Bonnie snickered. Suddenly, Torchic let its attack go haywire, causing fire to go everywhere. A speck hit the bag Bonnie held and burned it open, allowing Mudkip to escape. A second hit her hair and she erupted in flames.

“Get it out, get it out!” Bonnie screamed running around the field before Wooper doused her off.

"Yawn!" Clyde ordered.

"Mudkip, use water gun!" Amanda joined the battle. The blue mud skipper launched the attack and Slugma was smashed into Clyde. He dropped his bag and Amanda ran to retrieve it, untying it and allowing Ralts to leap out.

"Use confusion!" Amanda said as soon as they had reunited. Ralts concentrated hard, picking up the team members and their respective Pokemon. It then pulled its arms apart, sending all that it held high into the sky and away from the area.

"Thanks Mike!" Amanda said picking up Ralts and hugging it. “They just came out of nowhere. I wonder why they are so intent on following us.”

Mike’s face turned red from blushing and he recalled Torchic.

"I got some good training in today!" he said, not knowing what else to say. He wanted to change that previous statement to “I did it all for you,” but couldn’t bring himself to.

"So did I!" Let's go check to see if Jeff's awake yet!" Amanda responded. She recalled her two Pokemon and the two teens headed off to find their third companion.

"Seedot, razor leaf!" Jeff commanded from the field that the two trainers chose to battle. It was situated in the corner of the park. The special Pokemon released the barrage of leaves at Marill, but the Pokemon just rolled away.

"Marill, use iron tail!" Laura shouted. Marill wound up its tail as the spherical tip became a silvery metal. It then smacked it into Seedot. Seedot sprawled across the field and slowly got back up.

"Use growth!" Jeff countered. Seedot nodded and it began to soak in energy, turning its body a florescent green.

"Marill use bubble!" Laura followed up. Mike and Amanda approached the scene to see Seedot struck with the attack.

"Battling again?" Mike commented. Jeff let out a fake laugh.

"Seedot, use nature power! Kill that little rat!" he then ordered. Seedot released the attack. It formed into a barrage of stars which struck Marill in a blinding swift attack.

"Now razor leaf!"

The acorn launched the leaves at the immobile Marill, sending it falling back as the leaves scraped across it, leaving the Pokemon with many cuts.

"Marill get up!" Laura yelled. Marill slowly did, but it was getting tired.

"Seedot!" the acorn suddenly roared, its quiet disposition suddenly turning into an eruption of screaming.

"What's up with you?" Jeff asked. “Aw God, you’re not bipolar too are you?”

Seedot's expression changed and it suddenly began to glow! Mike and Amanda stared in shock as the acorn's shape changed into that of a small marionette-like figure complete with a pointy nose and bulbous green tinted thighs.

"Nuzzzzleaf!" the newly formed Pokemon said in a sturdy manner. It was short with a brownish body, a Pokemon known as a Nuzleaf.

"You evolved," Jeff muttered with a shocked expression before continuing, “into Pinocchio…”

Amanda pulled out her Pokedex and aimed it at the creature.

"Nuzleaf; the wily Pokemon. Nuzleaf live in densely overgrown forests. They occasionally venture out of the forest to startle people. This Pokemon dislikes having its long nose pinched." the Pokedex muttered.

"You have your first dark type!" Mike grinned at his friend. Jeff was completely still. He then leapt high into the air and made a fist.

"YESSSS!" he screamed and began to do the Macarena on the field. His new Nuzleaf looked at him with a weirded-out expression.

"In case you're forgetting, we still have a battle to finish," Laura reminded her opponent. Mike could tell she was starting to worry. Jeff stopped his dance and returned to the battle.

“Nuzelaf, crunch attack!” he shouted, wanting desperately to try out new dark type attacks. “Come on darkie, make with the purple energy!”

Jeff loved the display of dark type attacks. The violet hues that oozed around a dark type when it let off an attack, but Nuzleaf didn’t ooze anything.

“Why aren’t you crunching? Come on, you didn’t evolve into a pacifist did you?” he screeched, taunting his own Pokemon.

“Jeff, Nuzleaf can’t use crunch.” Mike informed him. “Just keep doing what you did before.”

“But I want to see the purple energy!” Jeff whined back.

“Then lose the match,” Mike retorted.

"Ugh, Nuzleaf, use razor leaf!" Jeff shouted at his Pokemon, not wanting to lose.

"Nuzzzz!" the Pokemon roared as it released the barrage of leaves.

“Ha, now I have a special Nuzleaf!" Jeff said happily, hoping the Nuzleaf would erupt in purple just to satisfy his desires. Marill dodged the leaves and leapt into the air.

"Use iron tail!" Laura yelled. The Pokemon wound its tail again and slammed into Nuzleaf. The grass type bounced back, but raced right in again at Marill.

It was then that Jeff remembered something from school; the one thing that he stayed awake for. Nuzleafs main dark type attack was faint attack. This was his moment to shine, to show off his dark abilities.

"Nuzleaf, use faint attack!" Jeff commanded with personal satisfaction. The Pokemon disappeared and reappeared beside Marill, clouds of purple shimmering where the Pokemon had been. It struck Marill hard, sending it flying.

"Ha, like what I learned in Dark Pokemon Strategies?" Jeff asked his opponent. Marill did not get up.

“Yes! You suck Laura! I am the winner, in your face!” Jeff began to dance again.

Laura recalled Marill to its Pokeball.

"Wow, you're an awesome trainer." she said, knowing that Jeff‘s immature comments were not what he really thought. Jeff shook her hand and continued his jig.

"No hard feelings about before, maybe we can battle again someday," she then commented. Jeff nodded and watched as the blonde girl headed off.

He then turned to Nuzleaf, the vertically challenged biped. It stared up at him and he leaned down to it. Jeff placed his palm out and Nuzleaf cocked its head. It then figured out what he wanted and smacked him a high five.

"Aww, little Jeffy is showing affection again?" Mike laughed.

"Hell yeah I am, this is a dark type we're talking about here!" Jeff responded with a laugh.

"Well how about heading to the gym now? I know you’re itching for that battle," Amanda suggested.

"Good idea, you can see me kick more butt than Jeff did today," Mike replied.

Jeff laughed and recalled his new Pokemon.

"No one kicks more butt than me. You can try, but you’ll soon learn that I am indeed the shiznit,” he hammered into Mike trying to sound as cool as his new Pokemon. It didn’t work very well.

“Let’s just go before Jeff starts speaking in complete slang,” Amanda said and started off. Mike and Jeff followed close behind.

Next Chapter- Chapter 9: Tough Battle! Mike's First Gym Fight!
Mike fights the Burgundy City Gym Leader for a chance at the Desert Badge!

FlamingRuby
22nd June 2005, 3:42 AM
::giggles at Jeff's victory dance::

Jeff is always a riot!

jirachiman876
22nd June 2005, 4:34 AM
*rotfls* That was a funny chapter, Jeff was his usual hilarious self. He's getting up there with greg. It was an interesting chapter, nothing much happened though except for an awkward battle and another show up by team steam. I gotta a couple of jeff comments to piont out for the heck of it.

"You two!” he shouted to his two grass types. “Fight to the death."

Pure genius, exactly what greg would do. I guess it was a good thing IceKing based greg off jeff.

"You evolved," Jeff muttered with a shocked expression before continuing, “into Pinocchio…”

Best, line, eva!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

began to do the Macarena

Funnest victory dance to do.
jirachiman out ;385;
PS Don't worry stonay, I'll start to do the same for greg when you get the next chapter out. Don't feel too jealous.

Sike Saner
22nd June 2005, 5:47 AM
*And now, it's time for...*


The Best of Jeff!
(chapter 8 edition)


"Hey Rhyhorny, keep your Ekans in its pants, ok? I can tell by that grin you just want to-" Jeff started to say before he was once again silenced by a smack in the face.


"I'd like to see your Pokemon," Greg said changing the subject.

"I bet you would! And by Pokemon you mean her-"

"JEFF!" Amanda silenced him with a shrieking voice.


"By 'they' do you mean the Pokemon or the other two objects Amanda has?" Jeff asked sarcastically.

I certainly hope we haven't seen the last of Greg. Put him and Jeff in a scene together and it's instant magic!


"Aww, look at the cute little flower!" Jeff said with a caring whisper. He bent down and began to pet a tiny dandelion that was poking up from the grass near the tree, looking up at Amanda to see if she was satisfied.

Terrific. And then he goes on to squash the thing, of course. Splat! :p


"You two!" he shouted to his two grass types. "Fight to the death."

That's just boss, and you know it. :D


"For the last time Amanda. My Pokemon are training, go find some random guy to flirt with," Jeff said as he removed the hat again, but was now face to face with a young trainer.

Delicious deadpan delivery!


"What is this? How the heck does your Seedot know razor leaf?" she asked in a distasteful manner.

"Um, the same way you know how to shut up. I ordered the attack the first day I got the Pokemon, and it performed it." Jeff released the comment with a pleasing glance. "Why, is it bad that it knows it?"

"The same way you know how to shut up". Yep, there's a line I'll have cause to use. :p


"God, I know I'm hot but why does everyone insist on trying to get in my pants?" Jeff said looking down and talking to Seedot.

If Seedot had actually answered him there, I would have lost it.


"You evolved," Jeff muttered with a shocked expression before continuing, "into Pinocchio..."

And thus, you have forever changed the way I look at Nuzleaf...


"But I wanted to see the purple energy!" Jeff whined back.

...JEFF! FRICKIN'! RULES!!!

And, oh, my God. Jeff said "shiznit"...
Pray for us all...

I think I am not alone in thinking that the world would benefit stupendously if you were to release a fully Jeff-centric spinoff. Everybody chant along with me:
JEFF FRICKIN' RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN' RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN' RULES!


The acorn spun into battle.

Meh, just one of those things I enjoy out of context. :p

...And YAY for the return of Burning Bonnie!

This continues to be awesome. I'll be here for the next installment, you can count on it! :D

IceKing
22nd June 2005, 6:02 AM
Pure genius, exactly what greg would do. I guess it was a good thing IceKing based greg off jeff.

Bleh, now im worried if I made Greg TOOO much like Jeff. When planning for Gregs charachter, I just wanted some nice comic relief and I recalled Jeff and his idiocity and realized that I could make Greg a moron too. I swear GN77 when you read my fic that I tried to keep Greg as far away from Jeff as possible! I made his comic relief more about flirting, slowness, and his crazy Slowpoke.


Anyways...onto the chapter eight review!!!!!!!


“Hey Rhyhorny, keep your Ekans in its pants, ok? I can tell by that grin you just want to-” Jeff started to say before he was once again silenced by a smack in the face.

o_0. Thats the first time I made that face reading this fic. It kinda neared the line with me, but then again Im being a hypocrite concidering the huge innuendo I have with the bad guys in my fic.


"They look perfect!" Greg replied while staring at the Pokemon’s trainer.

“By ‘they’, do you mean the Pokemon or the other two objects Amanda has?” Jeff asked sarcastically.


Wow...that was hilarious yet perverted at the same time. Nasty little Jeff :P Im beginning to wonder what traits Jeff borrows from you GoldenNoctowl...


“Aww, look at the cute little flower!” Jeff said with a caring whisper.

I'm sorry Im so stupid, but was that sarcasm? I have a really horrible sarcasm detector.



“God, why are women so confusing? If they aren’t complaining about oppression and unfair treatment, then they are giggly and ecstatic,” Jeff thought to himself.

*cough cough* YOU SHOW THEM BROTHER!


"Seedot, roll out of the way! Don’t let that beach ball topple over you! It would be Fat Tuesday all over again!" Jeff yelled recalling the day at Pokemon Tech when a fat student steamrolled over his tiny seedling Pokemon to grab a fallen donut.


CAPITILIZE THE FIRST WORD OF A SENTENCE!!!!! Sorry, I ignored other mistakes but that one just got to me. *shakes head* You are not very nice to "overweight" or as we southeners call it "dem kids who ate to much fried chicken and grits" kids are you. *shakes head* (I'm just messing with you)


“Is there anything I can help you with?” Joy said trying to change the subject.


Poor personalityless Nurse Joy...I was wondering how Jeff would react.


"No, But your Seedot is! The only special you belong to is special education," Mr. Farkin replied

LOL! I was thinking the same exact thing. I sorta found this passage weird as well since Mr. Farkin is supposed to be one of those mean, serious guys and I cant see him bursting out in laughter like that.


"I got some good training in today!" he said, not knowing what else to say. He wanted to change that previous statement to “I did it all for you,” but couldn’t bring himself to.

Whee, more errm "Protagashipping" (I dont think you liked Girlyshipping as much as I did...) I wonder how youre going to handle their shipping in this version since I dont remember Mike ever telling Amanda, or Amanda returning any signs. Then again, after the fourth gym battle I stopped reading all non gym battle chapters


"Wow, you're an awesome trainer." she said, knowing that Jeff‘s immature comments were not what he really thought.

Hmm, that seemed to be some aweomse charachter development right there, unless everyone else relized that by now too and only me, the retarded reviewer, as usual didnt realize it.


It stared up at him, and he leaned down to it. Jeff placed his palm out ,and Nuzleaf cocked its head.

Dont know why, but every time I see a missing comma from a coordinating conjuction, it always bothers me. Arrg!


Anyway, now that im done on commenting on every single line and paragraph time for the review. This chapter was another important chapter for both Jeff and Mike. We see Mike training with his pokemon here, which I think is extremely important in a journey fic, and you added a nice bit of humor in it too. I thought the pokemon did rather too well, some miserable failing would have been nice. Jeffs comments are getting crazier and crazier by the moment (Im sorta getting tired some of them, but am continuing to love others) and I wished their would have been more charachter development for Jeff than there was. Sorry im being so demanding with the charachter development. Im kinda beginning to worry for Amanda cause she seems to be falling into a damsel in distress with the cutesy pokemon position, but all the times she punches Jeff seems to balance it out. While your battle scenes are nicely described and detailed, their just not seeming to WOW me yet. I like being wowed :) Next chapter would be a GREAT time to sweep me off my feet with the battles since it is a gym battle. I sorta had a gripe with the PokeCenter scene, I just felt it wasnt as good as it could have been even though the whole "special" scene was priceless. Man, sorry Im just pointing out all the negative junk. I really liked the description of Marill (even though she is virtually the easiest pokemon to describe :P) and other descriptions in this chapter. Bonnie and Clyde are becoming rather predictable, but I know their going to become much better later on, so it's cool. By far I think your best trait is your style and of course humor. You're very excellent at drawing the reader in and then entertaining them with rib cracking jokes!


I expect A LOT from the next chapter since it is a gym chapter. Be sure to give the leader a nice personality for me since I consider charachters and transition the two most important things in writing (and you have transition down). You will be recieving one of my SUPER DEE DUPER reviews for this next chapter so theres some extra incentive to revise it good! I mean, who doesnt want to get a good grade in my SUPER DEE DUPER review? *crickets chirp*


Edit:


Everybody chant along with me: JEFF FRICKIN RULES! JEFF FRICKIN RULES! JEFF FRICKIN RULES

Ahem,

JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
WORSHIP ICEKING!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!

indigestible_wad
22nd June 2005, 6:03 AM
“Ha, now I have a special Nuzleaf!" Jess said happily, hoping the Nuzleaf would erupt in purple just to satisfy his desires. Marill dodged the leaves and leapt into the air.
You called Jeff Jess. He is such an idiot. He keeps on annoying everyone and assuming the idiotic.

You also don't seem to write women very well, or that girl wasn't listening to anything Jeff was saying. Women get mad when someone says anything like what jeff said. And the multiple times he said it would've made her hate him. She wouldn't have asked for a rematch.

GoldenNoctowl77
22nd June 2005, 6:53 AM
FlamingRuby- Why yes, yes he is! Thanks for the review!

Jirachiman- For some reason based on your last review I didn't expect you to continue reading, but you surprised me! Thanks for becoming a regular reader and I will be sure to continue the humor!

Sike Saner- My most loyal reader now it seems. LOL Thanks for the kind words and I love to hear feedback from the humor I post. What the hell,

JEFF FRICKEN RULES
JEFF FRICKEN RULES

:)

IceKing- Another loyal reader. Thanks for the input on this chapter. As for Mr. Farkin's laugh, the man isn't completely without feelings but his laugh is probably very monotonous. Yeah, this chapter had almost no proofreading because I was so busy today, so I missed a lot of trivial errors. I'm glad to see you based a character off of Jeff for your fic, but I hope Greg isn't a carbon copy. LOL I'll try hard to make sure the next chapter is amazing, but that might require an extra day since Conker comes out today :p Thanks for the review.

Indigestable_Wad- Didn't catch that mistake. Thanks for noticing. As for not writing women well, hmm, that's a generalization you made. Not all women are extremly sensitive and Laura is just someone who takes comments like thay in one ear and out the other. She knows he's just being stupid and half the things he didn't mean. Anyways, thanks for the continued support :)

DANdotW
22nd June 2005, 1:01 PM
OMG, great chapter. Jeff is classic and I don't think I've ever seen anything like him. All of his comments really got to me and almost made me fall off my chair. Nice display of Faint Attack, I love it when attacks are shown well in a Fic. Can't wait for the next chapter with the Gym Battle, I always did like them.

JEFF FRICKEN RULES
JEFF FRICKEN RULES
JEFF FRICKEN RULES
JEFF FRICKEN RULES
JEFF FRICKEN RULES

HG

Twilight Absol
23rd June 2005, 9:52 AM
and I have to say, Jeff takes the show again, especially with the rhyhorny part, that was just hilarious...Sorry I'm not typing anymore, I need to....zzzzzzzzzz

Bayleef Mistress
23rd June 2005, 4:48 PM
excellent chapter! I noticed that you put a capital letter after a comma. I'm too lazy to put it into quote, but here is an example: No, But

That was one of the few errors I noticed.

Oh, I almost forgot:

JEFF FRICKEN RULES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

eternaldarkness
23rd June 2005, 5:03 PM
Mikey! Back to writing I see! Eh I decided to re do one of my old ones. I wonder if were going to keep coming back and leaving over and over. Good seeing that your editing this and adding new things to it. But ill always be a fan of this fic no matter what you do it. Good seeing Jeff again! But this is a nice improvement since the original. I'll always be the first reader ha! Can't wait for more! C ya!

mindripper
24th June 2005, 9:08 AM
Ok. As people have said, nice humour rpesent in this chapter. However, I am not too sure about the innuendoes in there. A couple are fine, but it gets overused after a while. For eg, ekans in the pants was great, but when you add the PMS monster, the parts on Amanda's body and Jeff's conclusion that everybody is trying to get into his pants, it gets tired and it does not reflect the spirite of a Pokemon fanfic!


he didn’t want to be rude to the polite, yet sweaty man.
This sentence is not wrong. However, te word "yet" denotes contradiction, and I do not know how courtesy and sweat are contradictory.


"You evolved," Jeff muttered with a shocked expression before continuing, “into Pinocchio…”
Very good line!!!

A slight problem I have is with the speech in the fic. there is simply too much of it! You should try toa dd more weight to the speech by adding some text, spreading out the speech.

I also saw many instances when first letters of sentences were not capitalised, and it was mildly irritating. Also, there were a couple of spelling mistakes, but nothing major at all.

I liked the line about the rise of feminism as well. Nice one there.

All in all, a pretty good chappie, and good luck for the next opne.

Ladyumbra
24th June 2005, 7:10 PM
serebii ate my reply and i'm too tired to rewrite it. suffice to say i've returned and am readign this again.i cant wait to see it completed and i want dancign pineapple, mind you jeffs toxis dance is acceptable as a substitute.

Nagashi
25th June 2005, 3:53 PM
Once again, another awesome chapter. I absolutely adored the Jeff humour here, which was even better than normal, and I'm glad that Greg ****ed off, but was pissed at the Girlyshipping hint. Don't ask me why, but I'm a PMSShipper (Jeff/Amanda (If anyone calls me weird, I'll... probably agree with them)) :P I just think this ship would be too hilarious to pass up. They'd never stop arguing!
Anyway, I skipped Team Steam as usual (Sorry, I know how important to the plot they are, but they get on my nerves) and read Jeffs battle twice to make up for it. ALL PRAISE JEFF AND PINNOCHIO - NUZLEAF!

GoldenNoctowl77
25th June 2005, 8:12 PM
Thanks for the reviews everyone and sorry that there hasn't been a new chapter in a few days. All my writing time has turned into Conker Live and Reloaded time :p. I'll try to get a new one up Monday. Thanks for all the reviews again!

FlamingRuby
25th June 2005, 8:42 PM
You're welcome!

I have some new material for you to see...

HellZones
29th June 2005, 11:46 PM
This deserves being bumped to the top.

JEFF FRICKEN RULES

GoldenNoctowl77
30th June 2005, 1:44 PM
Ok, I'm apoligizing once more for not updating in a week, but I've been very busy. I've worked every day and am having some difficulties in getting in the mood to read/write. I will post a new chapter soon, and will get around to reading the fics of my readers. Thanks for your patience.

FlamingRuby
30th June 2005, 4:31 PM
Take your time, we'll wait...

GoldenNoctowl77
20th July 2005, 5:25 PM
Hey guys, I know it seems like I have dissapeared and that is partly true, but I just wanted to let you know the reasons for my sudden AWOLness. It has nothing to do with me wanting to leave SPP or stop writing, but for another reason.

A year ago, I found out my uncle had cancer. It was radiated and everything was fine, he was checked every month and it was always considered gone. They told him after 6 checkups that they could wait three months. Well, earlier this summer (about a month ago) they discovered that in that three month time, it not only returned, but spread throughout his entire body. They gave him until January to live. About 2 weeks ago we found out that it was worse than that, and he may only last until September. THIS week we found out that the cancer has attacked his intestines and there are several blockages that won't allow his food to be digested. So, everything he eats now exits from a tube and he is getting no nurishment, slowly starving and wasting away. Hospice said this may be his last day. I've been spending time there a lot and haven't been in the writing mood.

So, this is the reason for my dissapearance. Nothing more, nothing less. I hope to get back in the writing mood soon, but I am leaving for CA Friday and won't be back until next Sunday. Sorry that I left you guys high and dry, but I hope you understand.

indigestible_wad
20th July 2005, 7:51 PM
Don't worry about it. If you need time we give you no rush. Take your time and spend it with your grandpa. The next chapter can wait. Especially for a family member.

Charziken 13
5th August 2005, 1:49 AM
GN, before I say anything, I just want to say I'm sorry. I know how hard it is to lose a grandparent, and I hope your time with him now is wonderful.

I feel kinda odd switching gear s from condolences to reviews, but, I must now.

Jeff is even more freakin' hillarious than I remember, and I like how Mike has the self image issue. It makes him much more realistic. I can't believe how Jeff turns everything a girl says to him into something perverted.....
He was also hillarious with Greg, what with the Rhyhorn and Ekans, and the jumping to conclusions, and the "two objects". Comic gold. However, that gave me the most disturbing image of a Pokeball themed bra, what with the Pokemon being talked about while looking at Amanda. Special Ed was right on, I think. Go Pinnochio! We are now one step closer to the dancing pineapple! Yay! But, I want to see the chapter where Jeff wears the Snorlax suit the most, though. Best. Line. Ever. (you know which one). And, lest I forget,

JEFF FRICKIN RULES!!!!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!!!!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!!!!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!!!!
JEFF FRICKIN RULES!!!!

GoldenNoctowl77
22nd August 2005, 6:19 PM
Hello readers. I know I have kind of dissapeared again, but like I informed you a month ago, I was having a family crisis. Well, my uncle died recently and that made me even less in the mood for writing. But now I feel that I wish to start back up again. I would like to know who is still faithful to my fic though. Reply back so I know I still have loyal readers that will make my time worth it. :)

FlamingRuby
22nd August 2005, 7:06 PM
I'm ready, GN...bring it on!

::wonders what the pineapple incident was/is::

Sike Saner
22nd August 2005, 7:23 PM
Hello readers. I know I have kind of dissapeared again, but like I informed you a month ago, I was having a family crisis. Well, my uncle died recently and that made me even less in the mood for writing. But now I feel that I wish to start back up again. I would like to know who is still faithful to my fic though. Reply back so I know I still have loyal readers that will make my time worth it. :)

Surely, you must know that you can never be rid of me here, my friend... :) I will see this story through. Guaranteed.

JEFF FRICKIN' RULES!

DANdotW
22nd August 2005, 8:02 PM
Of course. I will always be a frequent reader/reviewer, even if my reviews aren't that good. *looks around ashamed*

HG

Meganium
22nd August 2005, 9:32 PM
Whenever you're ready man. I love this fic and have never been let down since reading it. I am and always will be a loyal follower of this fic.

IceKing
22nd August 2005, 9:32 PM
Im very sorry about your Uncle, he may have left our world but at least hes free from the pain of cancer. I wish the best for his closest family members!

As you probaly know, I still am a loyal reader to this (and very nitpicky if I may add :)) and I will be sure to review this if you plan on continuing this wonderful fic. Amanda and Girlyman freakign rule! (They need some love too! And no, I will not stop calling Michael or w/e his name is Girlyman)

Nagashi
23rd August 2005, 1:37 AM
Sorry to hear about your uncle, Golden Noctowl. I wish you and your family all the best for the future.

The real world always stops great fic writers from getting inspiration, but don't give up. You have loyal readers and many fans, so I hope you'll be ok.

GoldenNoctowl77
26th August 2005, 10:38 PM
Here we are, just as promised. Now, I didn't have a lot of time to proofread. Criticize my errors in grammar all you want, but I haven't written in awhile and I'm a little rusty!

Chapter 9: Tough Battle! Mike's First Gym Fight!

“So where is this Burgundy City Gym located?” Mike asked his friends as they walked down the busy streets of the city towards the Pokemon Center.

“Hell if I know,” Jeff replied while fiddling with his hands. He was engaged in a rousing game of self thumb war and his right thumb was on the verge of a victory.

“According to the map in the Pokenav, it should be right across the street from the Pokemon Center,” Amanda commented while drawing her pink contraption towards her face. Mike’s expression grew annoyed and he turned to Jeff.

“You were at the Pokemon Center yesterday and you didn’t even notice the gym?” He inquired with a tone of pure astonishment. Jeff ended the battle between his hands and glared at his friend.

“Well you can’t expect an intelligent person like myself to have paid attention to my surrounding area when I just discovered that my Seedot was diseased,” he riposted. Mike decided to let it go and the three rounded a corner onto the next street. This section of the city was extremely lively as it contained a coffee shop and assorted fast food parlors stationed along the sidewalk ending with the Pokemon Center before the next turn. It was a hot spot for trainers. Teens of all shapes and sizes rushed along the walkways, the girls stopping to window shop the stores that bordered the restaurants.

The three friends made their way across the road towards the Pokemon Center It was then that Mike noticed that the space crosswise from the Pokemon Center seemed empty. There was nothing to signify that it held some importance, save for a small sign near the sidewalk. The area was just dirt mounds and rocks. It looked as if something had been torn down ages ago and only the soil remained. It was right on the edge of the city where it met with the Burgundy Mountains, a small mountain chain that bordered it.

“The gym hasn’t been destroyed recently has it?” Mike inquired looking at Jeff for the answer. The lanky teen caught his friend’s gaze and smiled devilishly.

“Now that you mention it, I believe I noticed a wrecking ball smash a building down here yesterday when I was getting the low down on my mentally retarded Pokemon,” he lied through white crooked teeth.

“Well, I guess we go to the center and see what to do now,” Mike replied with a disappointed tone. At this, the group headed up to the transparent sliding doors of the red-bricked Pokemon Center and made their entrance. Mike noticed immediately that the woman standing behind the counter looked exactly like Joy, the nurse that they met back in Oldale Town.

“That’s odd,” he stated looking at the pink haired woman. Jeff gave a sigh as if Mike should already know what he was about to explain.

“These centers must be hot spots for druggies. Their smoke lingers when they leave and intoxicates the guests. That is why, like I saw yesterday, we see a chick that looks so similar to our dear friend from Oldale.”

“Jeff, come on. That explanation is entirely misleading,” Amanda cut in, her face gleaming with annoyance.

“Oh?” Jeff chirped inquiringly and folded his arms. “Then what is the real reason?”

“Isn’t it obvious? Every nurse around this area is related, and their particular gene pool was very shallow,” his female friend responded.

“How does swimming have to do with this?” Jeff cut in.

Amanda shot him a disgruntled look and broadened her explanation. “It was a figure of speech meaning that her family doesn’t have many different traits to pass on.”

“Oh,” Jeff said slowly. He was trying to sound like he understood, but it was obvious that he didn’t.

“Maybe you should explain it using hand puppets,” Mike suggested sarcastically, squinting his eyes from the sun’s reflection through the glass windows of the center. Amanda giggled at this.

“I’ll try it later, when our friend’s mind matures,” she informed him.

“Ah, if it isn’t the deranged boy with the special Seedot!” Nurse Joy said happily as the three made it to the front desk. Mike handed her his Pokeballs and took a step back.

“Why, if it isn’t the freaky woman with the similar family members and shallow gene pool,” Jeff retorted sarcastically. Amanda’s blue eyes widened when he said this. She was uneasily startled by the fact that Jeff’s brain retained the metaphor that she just supplied him.

Nurse Joy’s face, usually perky with happiness, suddenly went distraught. “Well at least that gene pool doesn’t include the lanky gene that your family passed on to you,” she exclaimed. Mike was awestruck. He had thought these nurses were carefree and never rude, but this one didn’t seem too happy to have her family insulted. He watched his friend’s mouth open to make a come back, but his upper lip just quivered a bit.

“Touche Nurse, touché,” Jeff murmured and stepped beside Amanda.

“We’re looking for the Burgundy City Gym,” the female teen informed the nurse when Jeff was safely out of the way. “The map seems to assume that it’s right across the street, but I don’t see anything but a construction zone.”

Nurse Joy rolled her eyes as if she had to explain this many times before. “Did you even bother to read the sign?” she inquired pointing to the small wooden post just out the window and across the road. “The gym is right there. Our gym leader uses ground type Pokemon and so, naturally, her whole battlefield is underneath the earth.” she then walked toward the desk to retrieve Mike’s healed Pokemon.

Mike shot a look back towards the area. It began to make sense. The mounds of gravel and soil were shaped in a sort of dome-like fashion resembling a roof to the right eyes. He would never want to live underground. It sounded too filthy, but to each's own.

"Here you go! They are all checked up and raring to go!" Nurse Joy exclaimed as she brought Mike's Pokeballs to him on a tray, her attitude going back to the helpful woman they all knew and loved. Mike immediately grabbed the spheres and tossed them to the ground, releasing the three companions he had made so far. Taillow flew onto Mike's shoulder and of course began to peck at him. Electrike scurried to his leg and began to tug on it. Torchic just jogged in place.

"You guys ready to prove how good you are?" the teen smiled. Taillow just pecked hard again and Electrike shook its head, indicating that it didn’t seem ready.

Mike ignored the antics of his Pokemon and walked out of the center and into the busy street. People took no notice of him, but he knew they would soon.

"After I beat their precious gym leader, they'll treat me like a king!" he grinned to himself. Amanda stepped up next to him, sneaking a smile that Mike casually shrugged off. Jeff was still packing inside the center. He looked up to see Mike and Amanda already halfway across the street.

"Nice to wait up for me!" he snarled to himself and then chased after.

“The sign says you have to step on the red ring.” Amanda read as Jeff caught up to them. Mike looked forward to see a large red circle on the ground just in front of the earthly roof. When he didn’t budge, Amanda took the initiative.

"What a weird gym." she thought to herself as she placed both feet firmly on the soil inside the red circle. “And I’m stuck with the dirty work.”

Suddenly, she was no longer standing on solid ground. Mike and Jeff stood in shock as the area around Amanda’s feet gave way beneath her and she disappeared into the darkness below, screaming the whole way.

“Tremors! Run for your lives!” Jeff shrieked and tried to book it but Mike grabbed his shoulder.

******

Team Steam, panting with exhaustion, hauled themselves back into town. Bonnie looked up at the nearby clock tower to see it was already three in the afternoon.

"Time flies when we're flying!" she whispered sarcastically to her companion. "Where the heck could the morons have gone too?" she then asked. Clyde wasn't responding so she turned around to make sure he was still alive. The Magma Grunt was way behind practically crawling after her.

"Get up you nitwit!" she ordered, her bangs fluttering down into her eyes as she did. Clyde slowly got to his feet, panting like a wolf.

"Bonnie, I'm tired, can't we rest?" he pleaded through dry lips.

"We'll rest later; but we have to find the morons first!" Bonnie responded.

"But we could always go to the gym after some rest!" Clyde begged with his hands now clenched together in prayer.

"Why the hell would we go to the gym when we are looking for them?!" Bonnie wondered flicking her sagging bangs back up.

“That stupid lanky teen mentioned something about it yesterday,” Clyde answered falling to his knees.

“Then let’s try there,” Bonnie proposed and waddled down the road. Clyde began to moan as he dragged himself after her.

***********

"Amanda, are you ok?" Mike called down the hole that had once been solid ground.

"I'm fine!" he heard a faint voice respond. "There's cushioning for the first few feet. It seems like someone intended for us to fall!"

"Intended?" Mike shot a look at Jeff.

"Mole people," Jeff suggested to his friend. Mike rolled his eyes and suddenly leapt down the hole himself.

"But, but, mole people eat people!" Jeff remarked. When no one answered, he sighed and leapt down as well.

Mike‘s fall was rather pleasant and it ended with his behind landing on a soft padded floor. Someone definitely designed the hole above to give way on purpose. He got to his feet as a loud crash echoed through the darkened room. A male voice moaned hysterically.

"What's wrong with you?" Mike asked the owner.

"I landed on my head!" Jeff yelled.

“So, it’s not like you use it,” Mike retorted.

Amanda was by the wall. Mike noticed it was made completely out of dirt.

"Looks like a lantern," Amanda said pointing to an unlit contraption on a hook on the wall. "Mike, have Torchic light it and we can see what's down here!"

Mike stepped up and pulled out the red and white orb, gripping it hard before tossing it to the ground to release the tiny bird. "Torchic, use ember!" he yelled as the chick‘s red body appeared. Torchic nodded and blew a small flame onto the torch.

With the torch lit, Mike and his friends saw that the room wasn’t not very big. There was a floor of cushioning, a few feet of ground, and then a large metal door.

"Might as well try what's behind door number 1," Mike suggested and approached it.

"Thanks for helping me up guys!" Jeff moaned as he pulled himself off the cushioning and back upright.

Mike walked to a lever next to the door but was pushed aside by Jeff before he could use it.

“Let me do it,” the teen ordered. He placed his hands firmly on the lever and pulled up, but nothing happened.

“Down genius,” Amanda chirped with a wide grin. Jeff mocked her and then pushed it down, causing the metallic doors to sway open with a loud creak.

“Only Jeff would be able to screw up a lever,” Mike said with a crooked smile.

Inside the doors was a large cavern lit up by a collection of torches. In the middle of it was a gigantic battlefield littered with various boulders and rock mounds.

"I see you have made it!" a voice called out from the field, the feminine tone echoing through the cave.

A woman walked toward them, her muscular body covered by explorer gear.

"Which one of you is here for a Gym battle with the leader?" she asked, obviously impatient with this conversation.

Mike stepped up to her and raised his hand. He was still confused with the situation, but this woman posed little threat.

"I am!" he replied.

"Well then step right up laddie!" the woman responded immediately. "The name's Gretta, and I am the Burgundy City Gym Leader!" she introduced herself with a warm smile.

"I'm Mike," Mike said confidently.

"You three seem like beginners, am I right?" Gretta imposed, running a hand through her purple tinted hair and fiddling with a compass on her breast pocket with the other.

"Yes, from Pokemon Tech!" Mike replied.

"Well then techie, I’ll have to go a little easy on you,” she responded.

“Don’t bother,” Mike said. This woman was a little too flighty for him.

“How about a three on three match? You have three Pokemon right?" she asked him, her lack of patience as evident as ever.

"Yes, and a three on three match would be fine!" Mike replied. Gretta let off a toothy grin, her cheeks showing red through the dirt that covered them.

Mike could tell she liked company. Her face was pale and dirty, indicating that she didn’t get out much. Her brown eyes seemed happy to receive them. With a flick of her graceful fingers, a light turned on near the wall illuminating a scoreboard.

"Well, are you just going to stand there all day newbie?" she asked devilishly, obviously taunting him.

Mike turned and headed to his side of the field as Gretta went to hers. Amanda and Jeff stepped up to the sidelines and took a seat under the scoreboard.

"Here we go! Isn't this exciting?" Amanda asked Jeff.

"Not as exciting as my Nuzleaf!" he commented.

The scoreboard flickered as a computer voice ran off the battle rules.

"This will be a three on three Pokemon battle with no time limit. The trainer may switch Pokemon whenever he chooses, but the Gym Leader may not!" it spoke.

"Ready for the biggest match you've had so far? Let's see how you handle the all-mighty earth!" Gretta stated. She then smirked and gracefully threw a Pokeball to the ground in front of her.

*******

Bonnie reached the front of the gym ages before Clyde. She waited impatiently as Clyde huffed and puffed toward her. "You are such a weakling!" she roared as he finally made it. Bonnie then read the sign and did as it ordered.

“I don’t get what the hell I’m supposed to-” she began before tumbling down into the darkness. Clyde sighed and pulled himself into the hole after her.

"Clyde, this is all your fault!" Bonnie screeched .

"There's a door down here,' Clyde said ignoring her statement.

"Good!" Bonnie said and got to her feet.

***********

The Pokeball hit the earth with a thud and opened seconds later. A small elephant Pokemon known as a Phanpy formed on the gravely field. The Phanpy stood there with its broad nose flailing.

"Phanpy; the long nose Pokemon. For its nests, Phanpy digs a vertical pit in the ground at the edge of a river. It marks the area around its nest with its trunk to let others know that the area has been claimed." the Pokedex in Mike’s hand muttered.

"A Phanpy, huh?" Mike smiled. "Go Torchic!"

The Pokeball hit the ground and Torchic appeared.

"A fire type? This should be interesting," Gretta responded, obviously overcome with confidence. "Phanpy use rollout!"

Phanpy grinned and curled up into a ball. It began to roll towards Torchic gaining speed as it went and kicking up dirt.

"Torchic, dodge and use ember!" Mike yelled. Torchic wobbled a bit and then darted to the side, releasing a barrage of flames as Phanpy rolled on by. The tiny blots of fire hit Phanpy but it didn‘t stop spinning.

"Those crappy flames won’t end this rock and roll show!" Gretta laughed. "Phanpy use take down!"

Phanpy turned its direction and tumbled towards Torchic again, shattering rocks that got in its way.

"Dodge again!" Mike commanded. Torchic leapt aside, but Phanpy diverted its direction so quickly that the bird couldn’t react in time again. The rolling Pokemon smashed into it causing Torchic to tumble backward dazed from the hit. A bruise appeared on its forehead as it whimpered against a rock.

"Torchic, are you ok?" Mike asked his fire type. The bird slowly got up, opening one eye but finding that the bruise caused the other one to swell.

"Use scratch!" Mike ordered. Torchic raced towards Phanpy, but the elephant just rolled away.

"Like Torchic is going to catch my Phanpy while it's rolling!" Gretta laughed. "Rollout again!"

Phanpy spun off the field and around its trainer’s legs before heading straight back at the tiny bird.

"Torchic jump!" Mike yelled. The little bird did as ordered as Phanpy rolled underneath it. Torchic landed on the rolling Pokemon and struggled to keep its balance.

"Peck!" Mike yelled, placing a finger out toward the field as Jeff laughed from the sidelines. Torchic chirped and began to peck down. Phanpy rolled on, but started to slow.

"Now jump away and use scratch!" Mike shouted. Jeff was holding his stomach with laughter now.

“What’s so funny?” Amanda shrieked as she scooted away.

“If Mike keeps this up he’ll make it into the hall of stereotypical battlers,” Jeff replied wiping a tear from his eye.

Torchic leapt off of Phanpy and the long nosed Pokemon crashed into a nearby rock. Torchic then raced in for a scratch.

"Phanpy, use rock smash!" Gretta yelled. The Pokemon swung its nose into the boulder, spraying shards all over Torchic. "Now use take down!"

Phanpy put its bulk into the dazed Pokemon and sent it flying. The scoreboard let off a foghorn sound as the tiny bird crashed into the earth, sending dust everywhere.

"Torchic is unable to battle. Gretta wins round 1," the voice echoed across the field. Mike recalled Torchic.

"Electrike won't be any good against Phanpy. I have to go with Taillow!" He said to himself.

Mike pulled the ball and prepared to throw it, but accidentally dropped it to the ground in nervousness. He smiled embarrassedly as his tiny swallow Pokemon formed.

"Hmm, interesting!" Gretta said with her hand to her chin.

"Taillow, use quick attack!" Mike shouted. Taillow flew up and sped towards Phanpy.

"Roll away!" Gretta ordered. Phanpy curled back into a ball and sped away, causing Taillow to smash into the ground. It pushed itself back into the air with a flap, forming a small convex in the soil as it did.

"Taillow follow it!" Mike ordered. Taillow continued its pursuit, but the Phanpy was too fast.

"Rollout!" Gretta yelled. Phanpy diverted direction and smashed into Taillow, causing it to shriek in pain.

"How am I supposed to get it out of its roll?" Mike thought as the two Pokemon played cat and mouse. He then noticed the bowed loop in the ground.

"Taillow fly backward!" he shouted. Taillow did as ordered, pushing its wings forward and sailing back. Gretta had Phanpy follow it.

"Taillow, go straight over the loop hole!" Mike shouted. Taillow was already over before Gretta could react. Phanpy hit the lowered earth and was sent flying high, opening from its roll and giving Mike his chance.

"Taillow, use wing attack!" he roared. Taillow's wig glowed brightly and it whooshed by Phanpy in a fast streak. Phanpy landed with a thud on the ground with a gash across its leathery stomach. It was out cold. The scoreboard declared Mike the winner and Gretta recalled Phanpy.

"Not bad!" she commented while fiddling with a new Pokeball. "Trapinch, go!"

A big mouthed Pokemon formed on the ground, its orange body looking freshly polished This was an odd opponent. The creature resembled a small ant with an enormous round head and a gaping maw.

"Taillow take a rest," Mike said recalling his bird. "Electrike go!"

The Pokemon burst from its ball and immediately began investigating its new surroundings, sniffing nearby rocks.

"Trapinch, use dig!" Gretta yelled.

"Piinch!" the Pokemon squeaked and bit down into the ground. It seconds it was completely submerged under the earth that it chewed up.

"Electrike, use agility and race around the field!" Mike ordered. The Pokemon disappointingly stopped sniffing and yelped, breaking into a fast run as a small bulge from the ground chased it.

"I won't get anywhere with this. Electrike is too fast for Trapinch," Gretta thought to herself. "Trapinch, surface and use sand storm!"

Trapinch poked its head out of the soil and released a veil of sand over the field. Electrike was struck by it, stopping it in its tracks. The tiny green reptilian dog coughed as the sand grains swirled around the battlefield.

"Now use bite!" Gretta commanded. Trapinch dove under the ground and came up under Electrike. It latched onto the Pokemon’s front paw and bit down hard.

"Spark!" Mike yelled, toppling backwards as he did and giving Jeff a chance for another laughing fest. Electrike let off the attack, but Trapinch continued to hold on. The sand began to settle onto the field. Mike was now worried as there was no way to break the Pokemon off. Electrike yelped as it raced across the field. It smashed itself into a rock in desperation to remove the opponent. Trapinch unclenched its jaw and fell onto its back.

"Great job! Now use quick attack!" Mike yelled. Electrike jolted toward Trapinch and smashed into it. Trapinch tumbled but dove back under the ground.

The Pokemon then surfaced on the opposite side of Electrike, blinking its beady black eyes.

"Use faint attack!" Gretta commanded.

"Quick attack!" Mike yelled. Trapinch disappeared and then reappeared next to Electrike in a purple haze, but Electrike was already moving. It dodged to the side, curving its ankles and smashing into Trapinch. The Pokemon once again rolled onto its back and flailed violently!

“Use head butt!” Mike shouted as his electric friend bumped its furry head into the ant and sent it into a rock. Trapinch landed on the sand covered field and didn’t budge.


"Great job!" Mike yelled as the scoreboard gave him another victory. Electrike growled happily and did a victory jig.

“You did good Trapinch!" Gretta said recalling it. "Go!"

Another Pokeball flew into the air and burst open with a pop. The Pokemon took shape and Electrike was now up against a large gold and brown hedgehog. It stood on crouched legs and its scaly back stiffened. This was a Sandslash. The slash in its name referred to the claws of death that each hand wielded.

"Sandslash; the mouse Pokemon. Sandslash's body is covered by tough spikes, which are hardened sections of its hide. Over a year, the old spikes fall out, to be replaced with new spikes that grow from beneath the old ones," Mike's Pokedex muttered.

"Ok, be strong Electrike," Mike prepped his Pokemon. Suddenly the doors of the gym swung open to reveal the two members of Team Steam.

"Team Magma, Team Aqua, who cares!
We joined together and now we're a pair!
Two people with the same dream; it's really fun!
And that is to steal everyone's Pokemon!" they said with grins.

"Why are you disrupting an official match?" Gretta suddenly interrupted. “You should be ashamed!”

"Because-" Bonnie started but Gretta let off a shush noise.

“That is very disrespectful of you and I demand you leave. You are trying my patience,” she stated.

“What patience?” Jeff barked.

"Sandslash, get rid of them!" Gretta said with no fear whatsoever. Sandslash let loose a powerful swift, and before Team Steam could react, they were flying out of a hole made in the roof of the gym.

"What do you say we get this over with?" Gretta asked as if there was no interruption. Mike smiled.

"Electrike use quick attack!" he commanded. Electrike sped towards Sandslash, but it easily dodged.

"You’re matched in speed this round!" Gretta laughed. Amanda shot a look at Jeff.

"You think he can win?" she inquired. It was then that she noticed the teen had just fallen asleep. With a sigh, she turned back to the field.

"Sandslash, use swift!" Gretta roared. The Pokemon released the barrage of stars, which smashed into Electrike. It slowly got up, but in great pain.

"Electrike, quick attack!" Mike yelled. The Pokemon growled and rammed into Sandslash. It flew back, then twisted its body and drilled into the earth.

"Run!" Mike shouted, but it was too late. Sandslash erupted from the ground, sending Electrike flying and landing battered on the ground. The round went to Gretta.

Mike recalled his starter. "Good job buddy! Now it's up to Taillow," he said and released the bird again.

"Too bad Mike, maybe next time!" Gretta laughed.

"Sandslash, use slash!" she yelled with a little hint of amusement in her voice. Sandslash leapt at Taillow with its long claws prepped, but the bird flapped away.

"Taillow, use quick attack!" Mike yelled. Both Pokemon tried to hit each other, but each was dodging quite efficiently. Suddenly, Sandslash twisted itself and was able to knock Taillow back. The bird recovered well, but looked tired.

"Taillow, focus energy!" Mike tried. The swallow nodded and closed its eyes.

"Sandslash, use slash!" Gretta commanded. The Pokemon sent its claw at Taillow, but the Pokemon dodged at the last second. Sandslash's claw became embedded into a rock that was behind the bird and it struggled to free itself.

"Now use wing attack!" Mike yelled. Taillow whooshed by Sandslash, smashing it from the rock and scoring a critical hit. A large gaping mark appeared on the hissing mouse’s face.

"Now use quick attack!"

The bird smashed into Sandslash and it hit the ground hard. It slowly got up and clawed its way under the ground again.

"It can still fight?" Mike was shocked. Sandslash erupted from the ground in a spinning ball of fury and smashed into Taillow. The bird shrieked and hit the ground hard. Up above, Sandslash brought its claw down.

Suddenly, there were many Taillows lying all over the ground below.

"Huh?" Mike sighed wondering how his Pokemon just quadrupled.

"Oh my, your Taillow learned double team!" Gretta said in shock, a hint of worry in her voice. Sandslash's claw pierced a fake Taillow, causing it to disappear in a puff of smoke. The real one flew up into the air.

"Wing attack!" Mike yelled. The Pokemon smashed its wings into Sandslash with all its might, keeping its weight on Sandslash’s head until the Pokemon was forced face first into the ground. Taillow landed next to it and continued to keep it down. Sandslash struggled but soon stopped moving. It was out!

"I did it!" Mike yelled and leapt up. Amanda grabbed the sleeping Jeff as if to hug him, but quickly and decisively stopped herself.

Taillow flew onto Mike's shoulder and he thanked it. It smiled and then began pecking away at his head. Gretta recalled her Sandslash and laughed, her booming voice waking Jeff up. She walked up to Mike and held out her hand. In it was the Desert Badge, one of the many Mike would be earning. This one was in the shape of a pyramid and looked as if it was made out of sand.

"Take it, you've earned it," she smiled. Mike thanked her and grabbed the badge.

"I got a Desert Badge!" he yelled.

“I’m in a world of clichés,” Jeff said to himself.

Outside the gym, Mike and friends said their goodbyes to Gretta. The sun was setting below the horizon leaving a pale red tint in the sky.

"I'm sure you'll go far in the Hoenn League Mike," Gretta commented and turned back toward her gym.

“Thanks Gretta. I learned a lot from you. My battling is going to improve a lot next time you see me,” Mike remarked.

“And maybe you should live above ground from now on. It smells like *** down there and it makes you look butch. No one likes a dirty woman,” Jeff opened his mouth.

She turned one last time, glaring evilly at Jeff but trying to address Mike. "I've learned a lot today too!" she replied, then walked away, giving Jeff a flick of the middle finger as she left.


“God what a sewer person,” Jeff cackled.

“Sewer person?” Amanda inquired.

“Yeah, one of those nerdy hags that don’t see daylight unless a popular comic book movie or video game comes out,” Jeff answered. “They live in the sewers and entertain themselves with board games instead of getting a real job.”

Amanda decided to shrug this off and turned to Mike. "Remember your promise? It is time to head to Sandstone City, and my first Pokemon Contest!" she insisted. Mike nodded and the group headed off.

Next Chapter- Chapter 10: Skitty and Delcatty! Feel the Love!
Mike and friends are passing through a quaint city on the way to Sandstone when Amanda notices a Skitty.

jirachiman876
26th August 2005, 11:20 PM
hmmm, Well I guess I am still reading this. *everyone claps* Sry to hear about ur grandfather. I only have on grandparent left. Kinda sucks. Anyway, onto the chappie. Well, a gym battle, gotta love those. Interesting battle, twas different. I liked. Jeff is just getting funnier and funnier, kinda hard not to love him. Well, I got nothing more.
jirachiman out ;385;

Sike Saner
27th August 2005, 12:33 AM
IT'S BACK! Ah, how terrific. That was, indeed, a nice battle there, and Gretta was a nifty character *shoots self for saying "nifty"*

Now. You know what I must do...


Highlights!


“Hell if I know,” Jeff replied while fiddling with his hands. He was engaged in a rousing game of self thumb war and his right thumb was on the verge of a victory.

Let us all follow the godlike example of Jeff and make self-thumb-war the new global pastime.


“Ah, if it isn’t the deranged boy with the special Seedot!” Nurse Joy said happily as the three made it to the front desk.


"But, but, mole people eat people!" Jeff remarked.

Better mole people than crab people… :p


“If Mike keeps this up he’ll make it into the hall of stereotypical battlers,” Jeff replied wiping a tear from his eye.


"I got a Desert Badge!" he yelled.

“I’m in a world of clichés,” Jeff said to himself.


“And maybe you should live above ground from now on. It smells like *** down there and it makes you look butch. No one likes a dirty woman,” Jeff opened his mouth.

Jeff always knows just what to say.


She turned one last time, glaring evilly at Jeff but trying to address Mike. "I've learned a lot today too!" she replied, then walked away, giving Jeff a flick of the middle finger as she left.

XD Uh-oh...

GRETTA FRICKIN RULES!

You know, Jeff is awesome, but there are plenty of people who are perfectly capable of putting him in his place - and that's a good thing.

Meganium
27th August 2005, 1:24 AM
Like I remember but even better. Classic Jeff sarcasim will make any story better. I'm overjoyed that you decided to return to your craft. Keep it coming.

GoldenNoctowl77
27th August 2005, 3:51 AM
JirachiMan- Thanks for the review. Yep, Jeff is always on the ball with new and funny things to say. I tried to make the battle unique and I'm glad you liked it :)

Sike Saner- Yay! I always love your reviews lol. Thanks for your continued support, and yes, Jeff rules.

Meganium- I'm glad my writing has still retained its old charm in your eyes. I was afraid it was going to be bad. Thanks for the review.

BTW, a lot of you are mentioning my grandfather...um he's alive and well. It was my uncle that died. Thought I'd clear that up, it kind of bothered me :/

indigestible_wad
27th August 2005, 5:50 AM
I didn't notice you had come up with a new chapter! Well anyways, I'm not going to go too deep into the messed up spelling and grammar, because for this chapter, I would recommend a beta rather than just checking it over.


but to each is own.
I guess this could be a common mistake, but it is "to each's own". Is has to have a subject, something to talk aobut, and in that sentence it's left alone with.

I also noticed that you didn't leave any space when you skipped over to the team steam parts. But you put stars in when you went back to the protagonists.

I am starting to notice just how cliche your trio is. From what I can tell, it is almost a duplicate of harry potter, just witht the character's being in the pokemon world. I can tell that you're trying the parody angle into it, but it's not as obvious as some stories.

You did well with your battle scene, adding Jeff's sarcatic humor to show parody of it because it is very hard to do a battle scene without sounding like atleast one other writer.

GoldenNoctowl77
27th August 2005, 6:46 AM
Thanks for the review I_W. I didn't know it was "to each's own". I'll keep that in mind. Anyways, um...my people are not taken from Harry Potter in any way. I started this fic 2 years ago and I had no idea what happened in Harry Potter or who was who.I think Jeff is far from cliche. To each's own i guess :p

FlamingRuby
27th August 2005, 3:30 PM
Jeff is always a riot...and Team Steam has a nice ring to it....but well done, Mike, on winning the first badge!

Nagashi
27th August 2005, 3:43 PM
I liked the battle, skipped the Team Steam bit, and ****** myself laughing at Jeff once again. It's good this is back; I was starting to have Jeff withdrawals. You might want to cut down on the exclamation marks, though, as it seems as if everyone’s shouting.
Err, I was always though it was "To each their own."
I can guess that with the next chapter title, Amanda will get a skitty, so I just hope she won't turn into a cliché coordinator. Nearly every Contest Fic I've read has had a skitty in some way or form, and it bothers me. Why? Because meowth rule, are just as beautiful, (even more when they evolve) and have good move sets. I just wish they'd get more of a spotlight in contest. I know they aren’t Hoenn based, but since this is the archipelago, they could just be a different color to normal meowth, as was with butterfree in the Orange league, and prefer warm temperatures. The same with Machop being cool and Oddish being cute, tons of UU pokemon have great potential... but are just not used. I know you have this entire fic planned out, but please consider swapping skitty for someone else. Amanda's been sort of cliché so far, but never anything over the top as she's had Jeff to bring her back to earth, so I don't want her to "go the way of May", so to speak. Sorry if that was confusing.
Keep writing, please,
P/Arts

GoldenNoctowl77
27th August 2005, 9:32 PM
Thanks for the reviews guys. It means a lot. Well, during the morning rainstorm I managed to finish yet another remake chapter. Read and review! I think it turned out decent enough. I kind of stuck to the original chapter so it's not very original, but it's still good. BTW, Team Steam gets a LOT less like Team Rocket in later chapters. Right now they seem like clones but it's not always that way.

Chapter 10: Skitty and Delcatty! Feel the Love!

Mike and his three friends were now emerging from the tree line of a very dense and quiet forest. They had left the comfort of Burgundy City over twenty-four hours ago and had just spent a grueling night parading through the Burgundy Mountains. It was not a trip that they ever hoped to take again. The sun above glistened with heat, causing the road that met the forest to shimmer as if it were a lake. This was the spot that the three now made it to.

"I can't feel my body," Jeff moaned as the three pressed on, their sneakers squeaking on the pavement as they went.

"There's a small city up ahead. We can stop for something to drink there," Mike informed them checking out his green Pokenav. The group stammered along the road until it came upon some office buildings. They had made it to Putaka City, a quaint residential place with many places to relax. It wasn’t a very big city, maybe a few miles in diameter. There was only one road in or out of it, and the three friends were now traveling it. They made their way to the sidewalk as the traffic began to elevate.

“They should really do something about all these cars,” Amanda announced, unaware of the city’s transportation plight.

“It says on the Pokenav that this is the only road through the city. The rest is all residential neighborhoods. That’s why it’s so busy here,” Mike explained. He then tossed his Pokenav up, caught it in midair, and shoved it into his backpack.

"How far to the nearest diner?" Jeff mumbled as he dragged along behind them.

"It can't be that far," Mike hypothesized. Jeff put his head down and continued to follow them. They traveled on the left sidewalk watching the traffic go by. People were honking angrily and the cars only seemed to move every few minutes. Surprisingly enough, the pedestrian count on the sidewalk was manageable. There was a good amount of people, but it seemed as if there should have been more.

"I can't see why an island would be this hot,” Amanda chirped up while placing a hand along her hair. “Don't they get breezes or something?"

As Mike and Amanda pressed on with their conversations, Jeff began to shift his gaze downward. A trash bag was blowing on the ground nearby and it seemed to give the tall teen uncommon enjoyment. He began to stumble off course from his friends, losing himself in a crowd of people.

Amanda and Mike started by an alley, but came to a sudden stop.

"What's that?" Mike asked pointing to a weird three-pronged tail sticking from a trash can in the alleyway. Whatever the orange colored thing was, it was making a lot of ruckus as it banged against the inside of the metal dumpster. Newspaper clippings and old fast food containers began to fling out as the unknown creature pushed downward.

"Hell if I know. Jeff should know, he’s the expert on the weird and unexplainable, he himself being one,” Amanda replied with a grin. The two turned waiting for a sarcastic comeback, but Jeff was nowhere to be found.

"Um, unless Jeff learned how to become invisible, I think we have a lost boy on our hands," Mike stated the obvious. Now it seemed as if the two should care, but they just shrugged and turned their attention back to the wiggling tail.

The creature gave up on its descent into the trash and pushed back up, revealing itself. Its head poked over the side and it gnawed on an old fish skeleton that it found. Its body was a rangy orange with a hint of yellow on its stomach. Its face was cute but dirtied from the search it just performed. Its eyes were squinted badly as if it had trouble seeing far away.

"Wow, it's a Skitty!" Mike said, recalling how many times he saw them back in the pet shops back in Bayside. Amanda immediately pulled out her Pokedex.

"Skitty; the kitten Pokemon. Skitty has the habit of becoming fascinated by moving objects and chasing them around. This Pokemon is known to chase after its own tail and become dizzy," it muttered. The Skitty was very tattered and looked as if it didn’t have a clue what a bath was. On its head was a big red bow that seemed to be tarnished.

"It looks as if it had a previous owner. I Wonder why it doesn't anymore," Mike declared.

Amanda walked up to the cat and peered down at it. "With some love and care, I could make Skitty a great contest Pokemon!" she exclaimed.

The kitten pulled away from her as she approached. Amanda leaned down and set out her hand to pet it. The Skitty hissed and swung its tail, knocking her hand away.

"Ow!" Amanda cried out in alarm. The Skitty then leapt onto a nearby fire escape and up to the roof of the closest building.

"That thing is decently acrobatic," Mike concluded as he looked up at where it had gone. Amanda stood up with an angry expression on her face.

"It’s too bad it’s antisocial,” she snarled.

"We better look for our lost comrade. Knowing Jeff he couldn't have gotten far," Mike changed the subject. Amanda nodded and they started off. Skitty watched them go from the top of the building. After they were far enough ahead it made its decent to search through the trash again.

********

Jeff walked on for what seemed like hours, the bag flowing gently between two pairs of legs ahead of him as he moved.

"Guys, are you two not smart enough to find your way to a diner?" he whined and finally looked up. The two pairs of legs turned in surprise, and Jeff realized that he wasn't following his friends.

"I beg your pardon?" a brown haired woman with thick, curved glasses hissed with a nasty expression.

"Um…sorry, I thought you were someone else," the startled teen replied with a false grin. The woman turned abruptly and the man she was with followed her. Jeff looked around the street looking for his friends. Mike and Amanda were gone. He was lost; Jeff Flays was lost in the city. This made the count about fifty times now.

"Oh that is just great!" he screamed at the top of his lungs to no one in particular. He started to walk on, hoping that they were not far off. A group of kids were gathering around a young woman up ahead of him.

"What goes on here?" Jeff inquired as he approached. He grabbed a young boy by the head and shoved him aside, breaking through the crowd to find a woman with a Pokemon by her side. She seemed to be showing it off. Her long blonde hair was curled at the tip and her blue eyes were fixed on the cat Pokemon to her right.

"Delcatty; the prim Pokemon. Delcatty prefers to live an unfettered existence in which it can do as it pleases at its own pace. Because this Pokemon eats and sleeps whenever it decides, its daily routines are completely random," Jeff's Pokedex said as he scanned it. The large cat was a light orange and it had big curvy eyes. In fact, its whole body was sleek and curvy. The tail ended in a rosebud shape.

"Wow, a Pokedex. I'd say you're a trainer!" the girl broke character from her show and smiled at Jeff, her white teeth perfectly aligned.

"I swear, if she wants a match I am going to kick her!" Jeff said in his mind. He was tired of being asked for matches at times he should be focusing on other things, like sleeping or finding his friends. “Yes, I am a trainer,” he stated with bulging eyes and a fake nod of politeness.

"Well then trainer, take a seat and enjoy my pretty friend here!" the woman responded and curved her head in a flirty manner while blinking her bright eyes. Her grin was warm and Jeff felt himself actually liking her. She didn't want a battle, and she was asking him to relax and watch her. She was perfect!

"I'll sit," he found himself squeaking a little too loud, “as long as you tell me your name." The kids around him giggled immaturely and the girl smiled again.

"My name is Christina, Christina Poppleby," she answered. Jeff soaked in the name and sat down, pushing aside some more kids in the process. The one to his left began to cry and rushed away.

"Well now, as many of you know I am a Pokemon Street Performer!" she yelled so that everyone could hear her. "My Delcatty and I will be giving you a wondrous show!"

********

Mike and Amanda stopped at a nearby diner on their search for Jeff. Amanda gave off a sigh as she sat at the outdoor table sipping an iced tea.

"I wish that Skitty was nicer. It's so cute, but a real snot," she remarked to her friend. Mike nodded in acknowledgement. They both suddenly heard some commotion coming from around the corner. Mike tipped the waiter and the two shot off towards it.

"Maybe Jeff is over there. He is usually attracted to large crowds!" Mike laughed. The two rounded the bend to find Christina and her acrobatic Delcatty entertaining the swarm.

"Wow! A Delcatty!" Amanda screamed excitedly. She raced into the crowd and bumped into a lanky teen sitting Indian style on the pavement.

"Oh, hi Jeff," she said unenthusiastically and scooted closer to the front. She then realized who she just passed up and turned around. "Jeff, you nitwit! We've been searching all day and you're watching a Delcatty!"

Mike finally caught up to them.

"Answer me you buffoon!" Amanda roared glaring angrily at Jeff. Her friend sat in a trance. He was too busy watching the beauty up ahead to pay attention to her.

"We've lost him," Mike grinned. Amanda turned to a little girl seated next to Jeff. The child’s green eyes looked as if she just got done crying. In her hands was a large plush Lapras.

"Can I see your cute Lapras doll for a moment sweetie?" Amanda asked quietly. The little girl smiled and handed it to her. Amanda turned back to Jeff and smashed the doll into the side of his head. Jeff flinched, but continued his stare. Amanda smacked him again, and this time he fell back. The crowd began to giggle.

"Thanks!" she said handing the doll back to the girl, who stood up and beat another kid with it. It was apparent that she learned a new pastime today.

"There seems to be a bit of a situation in my crowd," Christina said eyeing Amanda with a disgruntled look. Amanda embarrassedly laughed and stepped up to her.

"I'm sorry; we've just been looking for this idiot all day," she said turning to Jeff and presenting him with her hands. Christina smiled.

"Okay kids, that's it for today! See you tomorrow!" With that the kids dispersed. "Well now, looks like you're pretty sought after," Christina said laughing to a shrugging Jeff. "Why don't you three come to my house for some lunch?" she then added in. Jeff nodded instantly, his stomach growling in the process.

**************

Team Steam was watching this scene play out from the rooftops of the buildings across the street.

"Well now, a cute performing Delcatty!" Bonnie said excitedly. "I could really use one of those."

Clyde sighed and turned around in boredom. He was now face to face with a rabid looking Skitty. It glared at him and then leapt onto his chest, hissing with annoyance. Clyde screamed and jumped up as the kitten clawed frantically.

“Help me, this thing has gone mad!” he wailed as the cat tore the front of his uniform. Bonnie wasn't paying attention. She continued to spy on the Delcatty below as Clyde struggled with the possessed Pokemon behind her. He finally pried the feline off, cloth from his clothing ripping away with the Pokemon’s claws. He tossed it to the ground and the Skitty ran away, its red bow flopping as it went. Bonnie finally turned around.

"Clyde, stop fooling around and let's go! Those morons aren't going to lead themselves to the shrine!" she said. Clyde sighed again and poked at his exposed chest.

********

The group sat down on a picnic table in Christina's backyard while happily eating some sandwiches that she set out. They were in a small residential neighborhood at the edge of the city. Everyone had released their Pokemon for some much needed relaxation.

"I like your Delcatty," Amanda complimented Christina. "I saw a cute Skitty when we entered town, but that thing was insane!"

Christina stood up. "Yeah, I know that poor Pokemon. I've seen it around many times. It lost one Pokemon contest and its trainer left it in the alley," she said sadly. Amanda was shocked at this.

"You mean it’s abandoned?" she inquired in disbelief. Christina nodded.

"And not one person in this town gives it a second glance. They see it as a menace. I really never got the chance to help it out with my schedule, let alone get close to it," she answered. Electrike ran around the backyard, inspecting every nook and cranny before leaping into Mike's lap.

"I would never abandon my Pokemon just because of a loss," Mike stated petting Electrike.

Skitty peered over the rooftop of a building bordering the yard. It saw the group and eyed the food on the table. It then leapt into the tree in the corner of the backyard. The group continued their conversation.

"I wish I could tell that Skitty that I meant no harm and I just wanted to pet it," Amanda said.

"Geeze, it's just a stray cat! They're everywhere. Why is this one different?" Jeff spoke up with his mouth full of food. Amanda and Christina glared at him.

"Hmm, maybe you were right about the idiot part," Christina stammered. Amanda laughed and looked out to see if her Pokemon were all right. Ralts and Mudkip were playing by the tree. She then noticed Skitty above them.

"Speak of the devil!" she said standing up.

Amanda took some food with her and walked towards the tree. Skitty saw this and went deeper inside the branches to hide itself.

"I won't hurt you! Here, I'll just leave some food at the foot of the tree," Amanda remarked. Skitty peaked out. It was obviously hungry. Amanda smiled and the Pokemon started down. It made it to the bottom after some reluctance and began to eat. Amanda reached out her hand and stroked its back. It’s fur was cold, and Amanda felt a great deal of pity. Skitty finished its meal and looked up at her. Amanda smiled again and the Pokemon just sat there.

"Don't worry," Amanda whispered. She put her arms around it and picked it up. Skitty couldn't help but allow her to.

"Wow, someone's made a friend just like herself! Insane and possessed!" Jeff said laughing and then began to choke on his food. Amanda shook her head and sat down, watching the struggling Jeff with a smirk.

“Can I please fill a bucket of water up for Skitty?” she then asked Christina.

“Sure, and in the meantime I’ll help Jeff. I don’t want anyone dying on my property,” Christina replied and nodded to Delcatty, who ran inside. It reappeared a minute later carrying a small bucket in its mouth. It set it down and Amanda knelt beside it. She pulled a cloth from her backpack and dipped it in. She then began to clean the Pokemon’s fur. Skitty didn't like water, but the compassion this trainer was showing for it was more important then getting wet. Skitty was soon clean and feeling happy.

Suddenly, Delcatty was being sucked away. The Pokemon dug its claws into the dirt, but it didn't hold out for long. Everyone turned to see none other then Team Steam with a grappling hook clinging to Christina‘s fence. They reeled the Pokemon in and jumped happily.

"Team Magma, Team Aqua, who cares!
We joined together and now we're a pair!
Two people with the same dream; it's really fun!
And that is to steal everyone's Pokemon!" they said together.

"Give Delcatty back!" Christina yelled. The two laughed and darted back over the fence and into the busy road. Jeff was instantly on his feet giving chase with Mike not far behind.

"Taillow, fly ahead and cut the hook!" Mike shouted. Taillow, who had been resting on a telephone wire above, nodded and flew off. Clyde saw the incoming Pokemon and released Slugma.

"Use flamethrower!" he shouted to his magma Pokemon. The slug released the stream of flames, which smashed into Taillow and turned its feathers black.

"Now smog!" he followed up. Slugma covered the team in a thick smoke, allowing them to sneak across the road undetected. Cars began to honk and swerve, not knowing where they were going. Jeff leapt through the smoke but Mike stopped.

"It’s too thick, come back!" he yelled.

Jeff emerged from the smog and continued his pursuit. He wasn't about to let Team Steam get away with his Christina’s Pokemon.

"Go Treecko!" he shouted releasing the Pokemon. "Use pound!"

The green lizard nodded and raced in.

"Slugma, flamethrower!" Clyde shouted again. Slugma let off the attack, but Treecko dodged and smashed its shoulder into the soft body of the opponent Pokemon.

"Now quick attack!" Jeff announced. Treecko landed on the cement and side stepped before smashing itself back into the opponent in a quick motion. Clyde recalled his fallen Pokemon. Jeff then noticed that Bonnie and Delcatty were both missing. He had failed!

Bonnie ran laughing towards the forest at the edge of the city. She was almost home free! She felt a little bad for leaving Clyde, but they could always meet back up when the coast was clear.

Suddenly, a small kitten and a familiar girl leapt into her only means of escape. "Drop the Pokemon!" Amanda commanded, her brown hair flowing with a light breeze. They were near a small lake that bordered the forest.

"Not on your life wench!" Bonnie replied tossing a familiar sphere to release Wooper. "Use water gun!"

Wooper let loose the attack, but Skitty dodged.

"Um, you want to battle?" Amanda asked it. Skitty nodded and Amanda smiled. "Skitty use tackle!"

The cat raced towards Wooper and smashed into it.

"Counter with slam!" Bonnie ordered. Wooper did a spin and smacked its tail into Skitty a lot harder then the cat hit it and sent the feline flying.

"Skitty use attract!" Amanda said, knowing her favorite attack should do the trick. Skitty let loose a barrage of hearts and made a seductive smile. Wooper was instantly in love, its eyes filled with hearts.

"What are you doing you fool, use water gun!" Bonnie pleaded. Wooper just stood there all lovey-dovey.

"Double slap!" Amanda ordered. Skitty used its tail to strike Wooper repeatedly, then sent it flying into Bonnie. The blonde toppled over and the tethered Delcatty landed next to her.

"Torchic, break the rope with ember!" Mike said as he approached the scene with his fowl Pokemon next to him. Torchic let loose the attack and the rope around Delcatty gave way. Jeff made it next with Nuzleaf. The grass type was holding a struggling Clyde in its hands. It tossed the Magma Grunt at Bonnie, who screamed and put her arms up to shield herself.

"Skitty, tackle!" Amanda shouted. The Pokemon blazed towards the team and smashed into them really hard. They rolled into the lake and were swept away by the current, screaming as they went.

"You did it!" Amanda yelled picking up the kitten. Skitty was so happy with itself that it allowed Amanda to hug it tightly.

"Looks like you made a new friend," Christina said.

“Two new friends,” Amanda replied with a smile to indicate that she felt Christina was a friend.

Christina walked up to Amanda and held out her hand. In it was a small pink scarf. "Here, take this. The judges in the contest at Sandstone will definitely take a liking to Skitty if its wearing this. It‘s better than that crappy bow," she said happily. Amanda was a little reluctant.

"Go on, it's the least I could do for you since you saved Delcatty!" Christina insisted. Amanda nodded and grabbed the scarf. She then bent down and removed the dirty old red bow and placed the cute pink scarf on the feline’s neck. Skitty leapt up and down happily.

"You have a new contest Pokemon!" Mike stated the obvious. Amanda smiled.

"Are you ready to win some contests Skitty? I promise I won't abandon you like your other trainer if you lose!" she assured it. Skitty happily purred indicating it wanted to be her Pokemon.

“Well, I guess this is goodbye then,“ Mike said suddenly turning to Christina. “If we want to make that contest then we have to get a move on.”

“But, but, I love her!” Jeff suddenly spoke up.

“Aw honey, just don’t. You’re way out of my league. Sorry to break it to you like this,” Christina said nervously.

Jeff’s mouth dropped and he looked as if he wanted to tear her apart. Before he could react, Mike grabbed him by the arm and dragged him away.

"Jeff, there will be others," he said in a tone that obviously meant he didn’t believe himself. Jeff folded his arms and continued to sulk as they made their way into the forest; Amanda with her new Skitty.

Next Chapter- Chapter 11: Forest of Frights! A Ghoulish Experience!
Mike and friends make their way through a dark forest where a strange Pokemon stalks them.

FlamingRuby
27th August 2005, 9:56 PM
Aww...Skitty is a cute Pokemon, but just be careful Amanda doesn't turn into a "May"

Renagadez
27th August 2005, 10:03 PM
Aww...Skitty is a cute Pokemon, but just be careful Amanda doesn't turn into a "May"

lol a may? BtW nice chapter keep it up.

indigestible_wad
27th August 2005, 10:29 PM
Interesting. You obviously didn't want the relationship with jeff to work so you didn't put much time into it. You also put a whole bunch of random quotes in for him making it seem like he didn't know what he was doing. You really do a great job on jeff.

Your pbattle scene was a little better than last chapter's.

IceKing
27th August 2005, 10:58 PM
I did it!" Mike yelled and leapt up. Amanda grabbed the sleeping Jeff as if to hug him, but quickly and decisively stopped herself.



PMSSshipping hint ay?


The three friends made their way across the road towards the Pokemon Center. It was then that Mike noticed that the space crosswise from the Pokemon Center seemed empty. There was nothing to signify that it held some importance, save (?) for a small sign near the sidewalk. The area was just dirt mounds and rocks. It looked as if something had been torn down ages ago and only the soil remained. It was right on the edge of the city where it met with the Burgundy Mountains, a small mountain chain that bordered it.

Great to have this fic back! I wasnt too fond of the gym chapter because I felt all the mistakes got in the way and it felt kinda choppy. The gym battle itself was full of battling cliches, but I think that was done on purpose from what I heard from Jeff. The battles weren't that outstnading but they were good enough. I realyl liked the Nurse Joy tidbit, I was planning somethign like that for the very end of my fic. As much as it pains me to say it, Im getting kind of tired of Jeff. I want to see a bit more from him then just a bunch of funny comments

Onto chapter ten...

Hmm, you had a good chance for great development for Jeff, but didnt utilize it to the max. I noticed that your fic is following the "anime" pattern and I suggest you try to break away from it. Mudkip,Ralts, and Skitty are really really overused coordinator pokemon, but Im not reayl going to complain unless you make them really stereotypical. Add a little spice and I wont care. Im glad to know Bonnie and Clyde are going to change as well! Repetiveness is bad. Poor Jeff, it woudl have been nice for him to have a lady. *gets idea for own fic* Woah, you gave me a great idea *jots it down*


Overall, I dont think these chapter were as gooda s the last ones and need to break out of the regular pattern. A bit more detail and better attentio nto grammar coudl help as well, but I still like this fic especially with Amanda. Go Girlyshipping!

Nagashi
27th August 2005, 11:14 PM
"I can't feel my body," Jeff moaned as the three pressed on, their sneakers squeaking on the pavement as they went.
Why would he want to feel his body?


"It can't be that far," Mike hypothesized.
Er… what? ^_^;;


A trash bag was blowing on the ground nearby and it seemed to give the tall teen uncommon enjoyment. He began to stumble off course from his friends, losing himself in a crowd of people.
XD


Now it seemed as if the two should care, but they just shrugged and turned their attention back to the wiggling tail.
Mike and Amanda are starting to piss me off with their constant disrespect to Jeff. Ok, he isn’t normal, but they treat him like ****. Bleh, another flaw for non-sueism, but an annoying one.


it muttered.
Why would a pokedex mutter? You don’t need to find different verbs for each word, said will do most of the time.


"It looks as if it had a previous owner. I Wonder why it doesn't anymore," Mike declared.
That wasn't a declaration, it was a question.


The two pairs of legs turned in surprise, and Jeff realized that he wasn't following his friends.
I think you mean “the pair of legs”.


Jeff soaked in the name and sat down, pushing aside some more kids in the process. The one to his left began to cry and rushed away.
Yet another awesome Jeff moment.

Aw man, I would do the rest but I really can’t be bothered.

And yay for Jeff getting turned down! I'm a PMS Shipper. XD

jirachiman876
27th August 2005, 11:14 PM
Well interesting chapter. Pretty good. Description is pretty good. I really have nothing to say. Tis cool amanda got skitty and jeff had a crush. Poor Jeff. Great Jeff coments too.
jirachiman out ;385;

GoldenNoctowl77
27th August 2005, 11:54 PM
Flaming Ruby- Um, I started this fic before May was a character. LOL, so it would really be them copying off of me :p. I based Amanda off of a friend of mine. One that is always nice but looses her temper a lot. You have yet to see the true Amanda as she hasn't really been mad yet, but she does her share in later chapters.

Renegadez- A new reader, yay! Thanks for reading!

I_W- Thanks for the review. Yep, more random Jeff. Also, these are remake chapters you know, so I can't really dwelve any further than I did before. If Jeff and Christina were to be a couple, it would drastically change where the fic is going, so I had to end it.

IceKing- The tough reviewer. LOL. Well, the gym chapter was a little rushed because I felt bad for not writing in over a month. Plus, I was rusty because of it. I have to get back in the swing of things. Every gym battle after it is amazing though, I promise. You never heard the expression "the room was empty, save for a small desk in the corner." I don't know, I've seen it in writing a lot. Also, character development really hits a high in more recent chapters. How can you be tired of Jeff? LOL, he does have more serious moments and in chapters that have yet to be released (even as originals) he has a very serious side. He's not just comic relief, I can assure it. As for Amanda having sterotypical contest Pokemon..I started this fic right when the games came out in Japan so I was one of the first to utilize contests in a fic. They weren't stereotypical back then, but they kind of seem like it now. And Amanda only gets better. She plays a BIG role towards the conclusion of the fic. Thanks for the review!

P-Arts- He doesn't want to feel his body, he's just making an exaggeration that his whole body is numb.

Mike hypothesized (meaning gave an educated guess) that the diner wasn't far.

Mike is declaring that he wonders why the trainer abandoned it, not asking "why did the trainer abandon it".

Mutter- To speak indistinctly in low tones
The Pokedex wasn't very loud.

No, I meant the pairs of legs. There was the pair that belonged to the woman and the pair that belonged to the man.

Thanks for the continued support :)

JirachiMan- Thanks for the review. Yep, Jeff had a slight crush and Amanda got herself a Skitty. And Jeff was funny once again, and he only gets better ;)

Sike Saner
28th August 2005, 2:03 AM
Wehh, P-Arts got to my favorite Jeff moment of the chapter first! :p Ah, well...


"Thanks!" she said handing the doll back to the girl, who stood up and beat another kid with it. It was apparent that she learned a new pastime today.

Okay, forget self-thumb-war. Doll-based fighting is the new sports sensation.


Clyde sighed and turned around in boredom. He was now face to face with a rabid looking Skitty. It glared at him and then leapt onto his chest, hissing with annoyance. Clyde screamed and jumped up as the kitten clawed frantically.

Loved that. Hooray for semi-random, evil kittens!


“Two new friends,” Amanda replied with a smile to indicate that she felt Christina was a friend.

For some reason, this made me picture Amanda trying to give Christina a Pokeblock…o_0

It's kind of a shame that Skitty took such a quick liking to Amanda - it would have amused me to no end to see it spaz out in a violent rage on her or one of the others at some point in the future. :p But eh, whatever.

GoldenNoctowl77
28th August 2005, 3:12 PM
Thanks Sike! I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter!

Well, I'm moving right along. Here is the remake for chapter 11!

Chapter 11: Forest of Frights! A Ghoulish Experience!

“Hmm, Sandstone City isn’t that far you guys. According to the Pokenav, it should be right through the Tearer Woods,” Mike informed his friends as they made their way up the sandy path that would take them to their next destination.

“Odd, it’s spelt T-E-A-R-E-R and it’s pronounced like ‘terror’,” he discovered with an odd expression on his face.

“That already sounds like a bad idea. Maybe we should just skip the contest and head off for the next gym or something,” Jeff cut in, his eyes suddenly filled with displeasure. A moment later he was lying face first on the ground. Amanda’s footmark was embedded on his behind. The female teen was staring down at him evilly.

“Jeffery Donald Flays! If you are even suggesting that we pass up Sandstone City then I’ll have to jam this foot down your throat!” she shrieked with clenched fists.

“Whoa there woman, calm down. Maybe we should find a store that sells womanly products because you seem to be having a visitor-” Jeff retorted but was cut off by a foot smashing down on his face.

“Amanda, lay off him. We’re going to Sandstone City even if we have to drag the wuss through Tearer Woods by his shirt collar,” Mike said grabbing his friend’s arm and pulling her away. Amanda’s glaring eyes went back into focus and she recollected herself. Mike’s interference always calmed her down.

“Besides, they say the forest is very DARK…” Mike emphasized the last word and smirked as Jeff’s big ears perked up.

"Did you just say dark?" he inquired. "Maybe there's some dark type Pokemon in there!"

“Maybe,” Mike repeated with a sly grin at Amanda. The three just then realized that they had made it to the forest’s edge during the commotion. Jeff didn’t stand still for another moment. He rushed into the tree line leaving his two friends behind.

"Ugh, I didn't want to rush into this. I just wanted Jeff to stop being a chicken ****! If you run into a forest like that alone, there’s a good chance that you could find yourself lost forever," Mike sighed.

"Well if it's the quickest way to the contest, then I say we follow him," Amanda voiced her thoughts and rushed after Jeff. Mike sighed and ran his hand through his messy hair. Traveling was starting to tire him out and it was becoming increasingly difficult to find time for grooming himself. He placed a hand onto his belt notch and pulled a teal Tech ball from it, releasing his starter Electrike.

"Let's go buddy! At least I have some company who doesn't run ahead," he said. Electrike happily growled and bolted off into the forest, kicking up dust as it went.

"Ugh, some pal you are!" Mike exclaimed and chased after it, following the rustling foliage.

Jeff had managed to get himself lost only seconds after marching into the woods.

"Dark types, come out of the dark!" he said stupidly as he did a three-sixty spin. He had noticed the difference between the interior of the forest and the edge that they had peered in from. The outer rim looked like it only had a few trees with a thick canopy, but the farther in you got the closer the trees closed around you. A sleek brown and beige Furret rushed down a nearby oak tree and scampered into a hollow log as Jeff pressed on. Amanda, Electrike, and Mike soon caught up to the searching teen.

"Great, we're already lost!" Mike muttered flinging up his hands. He then pulled his backpack off of his shoulder and tossed it to the ground.

"Calm down! Let's just make camp here for the night and we'll figure it out in the morning," Amanda suggested. She really wanted to get through the forest as fast as possible, but making the trek during the night would be suicide. Mike nodded in agreement. He then pulled a comb from his pack and began fix his hair.

"Where's Electrike?" he suddenly asked looking around for any sign of his Pokemon

***********.

Electrike happily followed the Furret through the log and out into the thick bushes of the forest. The Furret scampered along from bush to bush, trying to evade the Pokemon. They had nearly gone a mile but Electrike should no signs of tiring. The Furret finally lost its pursuer by climbing up a tree. Electrike put its front paws on the bottom of the trunk and barked viciously before growing bored. It looked around, but saw no sign of its trainer.

Suddenly, something gave off a devilish laugh from the right. Electrike turned, but it then heard the same wicked sound to the left. The forest was soon filled with cackling and Electrike started seeing faint shadows soar by. The canopy above allowed too little light to see what was causing the freakish noises. Bushes swayed harder as if the wind was picking up. The laughter then grew louder. Electrike backed away slowly and the laughing suddenly stopped as quickly as it started. The Pokemon was now frightened and started to dart back in the direction it had come. It turned a corner and came nose to nose with a skull-like face…

**********

Mike had begun to frantically search the area for his missing companion.

"Electrike, where are you?" he asked as he pushed away branches. Suddenly, the familiar yelp of Electrike filled the forest.

"Electrike!" Mike screamed looking around into the darkness. The Pokemon did not respond, but a cackling giggle suddenly was heard nearby.

"I have to find it!" Mike declared to his friends and rushed towards the blackness. Amanda grabbed his arm gently and pulled him back.

"Something is wrong here. We can't have you wandering off!" she said with an emotional voice. Mike couldn’t help but gaze into her blue eyes. They were filled with concern. It was her voice of reason that always kept him out of trouble when they were kids.

"Guys, I think we have some peeping toms!" Jeff interrupted them moment and pointed to the surrounding area. He was backed into a oak trunk and was biting his nails. Bright reddish eyes peered at the group from around the campsite.

"What the hell is going on?" Mike asked with a frightened tone. The demonic laughs grew louder with each passing moment.

"They don't seem to be making any moves," Amanda stated trying to sound positive.

"And they are all staying in the dark. We have to keep what light we can on ourselves," Mike said and released Torchic. "Jeff, grab some branches from that fallen log!"

"Are you insane?" Jeff said with a serious gaze.

“Fine, stay there and cry you baby,” Mike said and shot a look to Jeff. The eyes fixed their gaze on the black haired teen as he stood up. One eye in particular frightened him the most. It was unlike the others; larger and blood red. Mike wished he could make out what they belonged to, but the forest was too dark to see.

He walked over to a fallen log, making sure that the eyes stayed put as he did. The eyes had not changed their gaze at all. With a quick thrust, Mike pulled some branches off and ran back to camp.

The laughing stopped for only a moment and the eyes blinked in a consecutive formation around the camp. When this freakish display ended, the laughter started back up.

"This is not good! We're going to die here! It's like the fricking twilight zone!" Jeff whined over the sounds of the cackling. Mike set the wood in the middle of their camp and ignored his friend’s mumbling. He was not in the mood to hear Jeff complain.

"Torchic, help me out!" Mike motioned to his Pokemon. The tiny bird nervously approached and shot a flame at the branches that Mike had set down.

"They won't last for long," Mike said looking at Amanda.

"And it doesn't give off enough light to see what they are," she added in.

"Whatever they are, they have Electrike, and we aren't leaving until we figure out what they did with it." Mike stated blatantly.

"I'm out of here at dawn dipstick!" Jeff shrieked in between his rocking.

"Shut up Jeff, this doesn't concern you!" Mike replied sarcastically.

"I'm marked for death too, so it concerns me! Quite an adventure we're having. A month of stupid school, one badge from a total *****, and now we'll disappear in some insane Blair Witch incident!" Jeff stammered.

Mike rolled his eyes. "They haven't done anything yet! You assume too much," he commented.

"Yeah, it’s because they are testing us. Maybe they feed off our fear!" Jeff suggested.

"That's from a Goosebumps book you nitwit!" Mike yelled, growing more and more fed up. "Whatever, let's just end this and get some sleep."

"Sleep, hell no!" Jeff cut in. Mike sighed, but he didn't want to sleep either. Electrike was with these things and he had to find a way to get it back. He then noticed the big red eye starting to move. The smaller eyes moved away as it changed position.

"That big eye has something to do with Electrike. I can feel it," Mike said to his friends without taking his eyes off of it. Amanda looked at him with concern.

"What do you plan on doing?" she asked.

"Stay here! I need to follow it," he retorted and moved toward the eye.

**********

Bonnie and Clyde were now high in the canopy of a large oak tree. They too had been surrounded by the devilish eyes and were forced to flee.

"I hope eyes can't climb trees!" Clyde muttered looking down with fear.

"Shut up you nitwit! Maybe they didn't see us," Bonnie replied.

"Uh, not only are they big fricking eyes, but they are looking right at us!" Clyde roared.

"They'll be gone by morning!" Bonnie thought.

“We will be too!" Clyde cut in, hoping that he was wrong.

**********

Mike had stepped out of the safety of the campfire and into the darkness of the forest of eyes. The eyes that were near him didn't move at all, but refocused their gaze to meet his. They still were very distant, and he couldn't make out what they belonged to.

Suddenly, some bushes rustled to his left. Mike turned toward them while gripping Taillow's Pokeball in his hand. In a startling motion, Torchic leapt out of the foliage and squawked.

"Ah, it's only you! Want to help me out?" Mike asked it. Torchic leapt into Mike's arms, obviously frightened. Mike felt relieved to have something with him. He then noticed that Taillow's Pokeball was missing from his grip! He turned to see a pair of eyes laughing as they retreated into the blackness.

"Get back here!' Mike yelled to them. Torchic let off an ember striking the eyes and causing them to wince. They fell to the earth and Mike approached to retrieve his stolen item.

Mike stepped over to them, but the eyes disappeared into the ground before he could see what they were.

"Ok, that freaked me out!" he whispered and thought about returning to the safety of the camp. He grabbed the fallen Pokeball and realized that he couldn't see where their camp was. The big eye had appeared to his right and glared evilly at him before moving away. Something told him that it was trying to lure him to it.

"Why is it avoiding me?" he wondered and began to follow it.

************

"Mike's been gone awhile," Amanda commented as she peered over towards the frightened Jeff.

"You think the eyes got him?" the scared teen asked.

"I don't know, but the big one is gone!" she replied. Only a few tiny eyes were watching them now. The camp fire was starting to dwindle as a slight breeze blew in.

"Oh great, we have no fire anymore!" Jeff whined and threw his arms back against the trunk of the tree.

"Calm down!" Amanda commanded.

"No! I will not calm down! I have seen to many horror pictures! I know how this turns out. We'll be dead by morning!" Jeff screamed. He grabbed his knees and began rocking back and forth.

"Ugh, I'll be right back!" Amanda said and stood up.

"NO!!!” Jeff shrieked. “Never say that! In every horror movie, the person doesn't come back after they say that!" He was going insane.

"I will be back. I'm just going to look for Mike. Here, take this!" Amanda fiddled with her pack and brought out a small flashlight. "You'll need it when the fire goes out!"

Jeff took it and continued to rock. Amanda shot out into the darkness wondering when her friend would notice that the flashlight had no batteries.

***********

Mike followed the bulbous eye as it picked up its pace. He knew that it knew he was following it, and it seemed to be leading him somewhere. The eye darted away and disappeared around a large willow. Mike followed and saw that the forest opened up into an old, run-down, wood cabin in a field. The door was swinging on its rusty hinges, creaking with each movement. Mike could tell it was used recently. He looked up at he night sky. The moon was covered by a thick sheet of clouds. It was not the best day to be snooping around abandoned houses.

"At least I only spied one eye head there," Mike muttered and walked up the path to the house.

***********

Jeff was now sitting alone by the diminishing fire. Everyone had abandoned him to a fate worse then death- undesirable fear! He suddenly leapt up in fright as a popping noise rang out by his side. Nuzleaf stood next to him, its Pokeball lying on the dirt.

"You scared the crap out of me!" Jeff said before wincing. “I mean, you should go back in your ball. Only tough guys like me can handle this forest.” Jeff would be damned to admit to his Pokemon that he was afraid. Nuzleaf looked around the area. The eyes were now watching it as well.

"What are you doing out of your ball anyways?" Jeff asked it. Nuzleaf put a hand on his shoulder and sat down next to him.

"You don't want me to be alone?" Jeff asked. The Pokemon nodded. “Wow, what a loving friend!” Jeff then said mocking his Pokemon. Nuzleaf rolled its eyes wondering whether it’s good intentions were worth it.


Amanda had walked through a large amount of trees before finally coming into a clearing with a dilapidated cabin stationed in the middle. She looked down to see Mike's shoe prints in the muddy soil.

"Why would you go in here?" she asked herself, wondering why Mike would make such a stupid decision. "Mike is going to get himself killed! I guess it’s time to play Guardian Angel.”

She looked around the area. There were no visible eyes, but she wasn't so sure about going inside the house. She approached and door and pushed it open slowly. It creaked loudly before stopping against the rotting wall. As Amanda made her first step, dust rose up and resettled. She made her way inside where an old living room was. There was still a dusty old couch there and an unlit candlestick on a desk. Cobwebs littered the room and a lot of the furniture was covered in white sheets. Amanda saw Mike's shoeprints in the dust of the floor.

"It looked like he went into the basement," She said to herself as her eyes followed the prints to an open door. "What a place to go!"

She walked down the steps, each one creaking as she went. When she made it to the bottom, she saw Mike leaning down to inspect something in the corner of the damp and smelly cellar. The floor was submerged by an inch of water and the walls leaked as well. There was old toys and more furniture, all of which were pushed against the wall. The whole area reeked of mildew. Torchic was the first to notice their visitor. Mike stood up and peered at the stairs, shocked to see his friend. He tried to jump in front of what he was investigating.

Amanda curiously stepped down. She wanted to know what Mike was hiding from her.

“What are you looking at?” she inquired. Mike would not let her see. He seemed to think that it would trouble her. Mike always loved to shield her from upsetting things. He had good reason to. There on the ground behind him, was a human skeleton! Its bones were covered in cobwebs and dust and it was lying spread-eagle on the wet ground.

"Oh my god!" she screamed in horror. Immediately, she darted back up the stairs with tears of fear in her eyes. Mike raced up after her, his booming steps cracking the weakened wooden steps as he went. He grabbed his friend and put his arms around her, trying to calm her down.

"Shhh, it's ok. I'm here, I'm here!" Mike said brushing her hair with his hand.

"No it's not ok!" she screamed and pushed him off. Mike was taken aback. Amanda never had rejected his help before.

"There's a body down there! What is going on?" she shrieked. Mike held up an old tattered diary page that he found by the body.

"It was on the floor next to it. It seems like the poor guy was all alone up here. It is dated ten years ago. All it says is that he is very old and weak, and some stuff about living life to the fullest. I guess an old lonely man lived here," Mike explained. Amanda was starting to calm down. She took the page in her shaking hands and inspected it.

"Now, Electrike is somewhere in this house. I can feel it. Can you search the bedrooms for me? There has to be more answers," Mike asked. Amanda nodded without looking at him. His presence made her feel better. Mike gave her one last look and then descended down the stairs and into the darkness.

Amanda made her way through the dusty hall. The walls held pictures of a balding man surrounded by caged Pokemon. The diary had made him seem so quaint, but it looked as if he was caught up in some serious Pokemon smuggling.

She opened the first door she came to. Inside was what looked like the old man's bedroom. She inspected his old mattress that had long since lost its sheets. She then approached the closet and opened it. Inside was a freaky looking dummy with a key around its neck. Amanda grabbed the key and checked it out.

Suddenly, something came through the mirror behind her, its bright red eye bouncing in its skull-faced socket. Amanda turned in horror. "Duskull!" The ghost let out laughing. Its body was small and brown. It had no apparent shape. It was like a cloud of dust with a skull for a face. It sported only one wiggling eye that traveled between both eye sockets.

"The eyes, they must belong to these!" Amanda concluded and stepped back, hoisting her Pokedex up as she did.

"Duskull; the requiem Pokemon. Duskull can pass through any wall no matter how thick it may be. Once this Pokemon chooses a target, it will doggedly pursue the intended victim till the break of dawn!" her Pokedex stated. Amanda pulled out a Pokeball as the creature eyed her.

"Mudkip go!" she said releasing her water type. Mudkip stared at the Duskull as it hovered above. The Duskull let out a large purple ray, covering the Pokemon in a flash. Mudkip's eyes became dizzy.

"Mudkip!" Amanda screamed. She grabbed the Pokemon in her arms and ran out the door. She closed it and breathed a sigh of relief, leaning against the wall as she did. The Pokemon suddenly passed through the wall right near her face. She screamed and headed for the stairs.

Mike was now in a small corridor in the basement. It opened up into a room that housed many cages. He walked inside and peered around, frightened by the feeling that this room was a source of pain to Pokemon in the past. There in the corner was the source of the large red eye. It was a fattened biped Pokemon with a bulky coconut-like body and long, thin ears. Its head pointed up like a witch’s hat but the true terror was the single bulging eye.

"Dusclops; the beckon Pokemon. Dusclops's body is completely hollow- there is nothing at all inside. It is said that its body is like a black hole. This Pokemon will absorb anything into its body, but nothing will ever come back out." his Pokedex said.

Mike then noticed that Electrike was locked in a cage behind it. "Torchic go!" Mike yelled. His bird ran in from under his legs. "Torchic, use ember!"

Torchic let off the attack, but the Dusclops disappeared and reappeared nearby. It smashed into Torchic with its fists, blowing it back in a burst of purple energy.

"Wow a shadow punch!" Mike was impressed. He moved around the battle and to the cage as he did. It was securely fastened by a lock. Electrike was passed out inside, but still breathing. Mike found another note on the desk next to the cage.

"The ghost Pokemon know that my time is almost up. They grieve for me, and I have realized that they have become bitter and mean as I pass on. They have taken a liking to my hobby. This is good! I have friends to continue my legacy to this forest when I pass on…friends to smuggle Pokemon!!" it read.

Torchic was blown back again and sent into a wall, dust flying everywhere as it did. "Torchic, use ember again!" Mike yelled. The Pokemon released the attack, and this time it struck the Dusclops. Mike saw that the attack left burnt marks on the creature’s shadowy hide.

"Torchic, you must've burnt it!" Mike concluded. The Dusclops tried to attack again, but its burn was paining it. It gave one final look, then disappeared into the floorboards. "Great victory Torchic!" Mike yelled.

Amanda rushed into the room seconds later.

"What happened?" Mike asked her as she panted in the doorway. Amanda looked back without speaking. The Duskull was still on her tail.

"That!" she screamed and ducked as it floated over her. It came through the door, but was suddenly blown away by a faint attack. Jeff and Nuzleaf stood in the hallway.

"I got bored!" The lanky teen commented. “The eyes decided they didn’t want to play anymore and all came here.”

Amanda smiled and handed Mike the key she found.

“So you overcame your fear of this forest?” Mike asked Jeff as he fiddled with the key. It fit into the lock and Mike opened the door. He picked up his Pokemon, who woke up with a yawn.

"How you doing buddy?" he asked. Electrike yelped happily. He could tell it wasn't hurt.

“Well, I did some thinking as I sat in the forest. I realized that I was afraid of eyes. Sure, they were big scary eyes, but still eyes. And than I got to thinking- technically with the English language, I too am an I. Therefore, I shouldn’t be afraid of eyes because we are both the same.”

Mike and Amanda stared at Jeff with dumbfounded expressions.

“That is the biggest load of crap I have ever heard.” Mike stated.

“It makes absolutely no sense!” Amanda added in.

“Funny, it makes perfect sense to me,” Jeff replied. Amanda just shook her head.

“I will lose it one day. It’s only a matter of time,” she remarked.

The three exited the house as the sun rose above the clouds. Mike saw no sign of the ghosts that had plagued them during the night. They walked a bit of ways, and found that the house was only a mile from the road that would lead them to Sandstone City.

They stepped out onto the path and began to stretch. Jeff bent down and kissed the pavement, happy to be out of the forest. Mike turned back to the trees with a look of concern.

"Pity how those ghosts turned out…" he said. Amanda put her hand on his shoulder.

"One day they’ll learn from a person that wasn’t as cold hearted as their previous human contact.” she said. Mike nodded and picked up Electrike from his side.

"Good to have you back!' he said. The Pokemon happily growled and the three headed off.

Meanwhile, Team Steam was also heading for the other end of the forest.

"That was hell!" Bonnie whined and cracked her back.

"Yeah, those morons have no idea how easy they have it. We had to spend a night in a tree while they got a nice cozy camp," Clyde replied. They then came upon the rundown house.

“Maybe there's something to eat or drink in there!" Clyde stated and the two headed inside…

Next Chapter- Chapter 12: Sandstone City! Amanda's First Contest!
Mike and co make it to Sandstone City where Amanda trains and signs up for her first contest.

IceKing
28th August 2005, 6:07 PM
Hey GN77! Ill start this review off with qoutes of interest/major grammar problems


“Amanda, lay off him. We’re going to Sandstone City even if we have to drag the wuss through Tearer Woods by his shirt collar,” Mike said grabbing his friend’s arm and pulling her away. Amanda’s glaring eyes went back into focus and she recollected herself. Mike’s interference always calmed her down.

So, are they Jeffs friend or what? What exactly is there relationship? BTW, another Girlyshipping hint I see.


"That's from a Goosebumps book you nitwit!" Mike yelled, growing more and more fed up. "Whatever, let's just end this and get some sleep."

Was that realyl from a goosebumps book? If so, which one?


"NO!!!” Jeff shrieked. “Never say that! In every horror movie, the person doesn't come back after they say that!" He was going insane.


Im beginning to think of Scary Movie at this point


"That!" she screamed and ducked as it floated over her. It came through the door, but was suddenly blown away by a faint attack. Jeff and Nuzleaf stood in the hallway.


Jeff saves the day! w00t w00t!


“Well, I did some thinking as I sat in the forest. I realized that I was afraid of eyes. Sure, they were big scary eyes, but still eyes. And thank I got to thinking- technically with the English language, I too am an I. Therefore, I shouldn’t be afraid of eyes because we are both the same.”

Mike and Amanda stared at Jeff with dumbfounded expressions.

“That is the biggest load of crap I have ever heard.” Mike stated.

“It makes absolutely no sense!” Amanda added in.

That was the best qoute from the fic! Jeffs attempts to become smart...



Overall, I liked this chapter quite a bit. It still has the anime feel to it, but as I said before as long as its enjoyable, I dont care. Your descriptions have definetly improved a lot and this chapter kept me interested since I wanted to know what was going on. Turns on Duskull and Dusclops are stealing pokemon like their owner did. I can see from this chapter that Mike is pretty adventorous and risk takign like most fic heros, not that thats bad or anything. And about that Harry Potter thing, I can symphatize with you on that. Most stories/shows with a trio have one being smart, one being stupid, and one being in between, not just Harry Potter. As far as IM concered, as logn as the charachters have their own originality and spice, their good enough.

indigestible_wad
28th August 2005, 6:28 PM
The moon was covered by a thick sheet of clouds. It was not the best day to be snooping around abandoned houses.It's not daytime.

This chapter was done well. I saw no major spelling or grammar errors. Jeff continues to be an idiot, and Amanda is set upon him. It seems that Amanda gets more angry at Jeff than mike does.

jirachiman876
28th August 2005, 6:58 PM
Intersting chapter. Scary stuff there. lol. Well I got nothing more to say.
jirachiman out ;385;

Sike Saner
28th August 2005, 7:38 PM
Hi.

You know what? Whilst reading this chapter, I had to throw a shoe at Jeff. Do you know why I had to throw a shoe at Jeff? Because he said this:


“Well, I did some thinking as I sat in the forest. I realized that I was afraid of eyes. Sure, they were big scary eyes, but still eyes. And thank I got to thinking- technically with the English language, I too am an I. Therefore, I shouldn’t be afraid of eyes because we are both the same.”

...Yeah. That is the single most absurd string of logic I have ever heard. Even by Jeff-standards, that was ridiculous. Funny as hell, though. :D

That right there was one of my very favorite chapters thus far. It was a lot more atmospheric than many of its predecessors, plus it contained GHOSTS! And Duskull and Dusclops, no less, where typically something like Gastly or Shuppet would be chosen (although I will say that I do also like both of those Pokémon, especially Shuppet, and I, for one, would not have been bothered if you had gone with one of them). I do always like to see Pokémon that don't get quite as much attention in fanfics.

GoldenNoctowl77
29th August 2005, 7:25 PM
Well, I managed to get yet another remake chapter done. I think this one turned out really well. The original was so shallow and undetailed, but I spruced it up quite a bit. I tried to deepen the characters. Hope I succeeded! Read and review please!


Chapter 12: Sandstone City! Amanda's First Contest!

“Well, what do you think?” Mike asked Amanda as the three of them stood at the entrance to Sandstone City. They could all instantly tell why it was named that way. Every single building that was within view was made from a deep tan-colored brick that was ironically called sandstone. Even the busy streets and sidewalks were formed from this dusty looking sediment.

“I think it’s a **** hole. Who the hell makes a town out of such a crappy rock? Most people settle for bricks and cement!” Jeff interrupted with his opinion.

“Well I find it quite elegant,” Amanda said glaring cold-heartedly at here lanky pal. It brought her endless frustration to find that Jeff’s sarcasm extended even into the criticizing of a city’s hard work. She had known Jeff for years, but she had never really warmed up to his attitude.

“Well, according to the Pokenav’s Contest Calendar, Sandstone City’s Pokemon Contest takes place this afternoon at the Sand Gale Stadium to the city’s east. It also says that this week is Sandstone’s Contest Convention,” Mike informed his friends while fiddling with a new feature of his contraption.

“Any word on where to sign up?” Amanda inquired. Mike shook his head with uncertainty. His blue eyes rolled down again as he pressed buttons on the Pokenav.

“Hey, there’s a lot of people over in that field Amanda,” Jeff cut in. His bony finger was extended to their left. Many trainers were running around the field, each one with a Pokemon or two by their side. Every person there seemed to be practicing a routine. Jeff had found them the Preparation Field.

“Nice discovery Jeffy, but I’d like to be entered into the contest before I practice for it,” Amanda remarked with an annoyed tone in her voice.

“Hold your tongue woman. I shouldn’t tell you this, but because it will make me look smart and you like a *******, I will comply. Yes, I, the miraculous Jeff, have discovered the location of the Preparation Field. Amanda, being the total ***** she is, did not look to see what else was in the field, and instead proceeded to criticize my very good eye. For you see, there is also a booth near where the forest meets the field. Look Amanda, do you see? DO YOU SEE?” Jeff asked her while smiling from ear to ear and putting his arm tightly around her shoulders. “And what does the sign say above the booth? REGISTRATION FOR CONTESTANTS! Say it again with me Amanda. REGISTRATION FOR CONTESTANTS!”

Amanda broke loose of her friend’s grip and stared at him, her eyes blank and stupefied. She wanted to hit him so hard; give him an uppercut to the chin and watch his head explode. However, he was right and she was wrong regardless of how she didn’t want to admit it. And besides, he may have been an *** about it, but he was her friend, and in actuality, he was just trying to help in his unorthodox methods. She would have to let it slide.

“Come on you guys. Let’s get Amanda signed up,” Mike said stepping between his friends. Amanda nodded as Jeff taunted her with a devilish grin behind Mike. He added to this by rolling his bulging eyes.

The three teens stepped into the field and passed many trainers on their way to the booth. A small girl was having her round blue Marril show off a bubble beam while another was demonstrating the beauty of her little yellow Pikachu’s thunder wave. Sparks cackled from the Pokemon’s red cheeks as it lit the area around it with a web of electricity.

“Name,” the old gray-haired woman at the desk muttered unenthusiastically as Amanda stepped up. The woman was garbed in an old red dress and had makeup all over her face, obviously trying to hide the many imperfections that it showed. She didn’t even look up and was instead glaring at he computer that separated her from Amanda.

“Amanda Belicina,” Amanda replied with a look of satisfaction on her tanned face.

“And what contest do you want to compete in miss Belicina?” The woman asked her while typing busily on the keyboard.

Amanda really hadn’t thought about this. She had three Pokemon, each of which displayed different attributes. Her new Skitty and Mudkip would be excellent cute competitors, but they had little to no experience. She decided to go with Ralts and the smart contest as it was her best shot.

“I’m entering my Ralts into the smart contest,” Amanda informed the receptionist.

“Ok, miss Belicina, this is your contest card. Don’t lose it as it is required for entry into the competitor room at Sand Gale Stadium,” the woman explained to Amanda and handed her a small green card. “Good luck.”

Amanda could tell that the last comment was forced. The woman had no enthusiasm for contests and it was evident by the tone in her voice. Amanda politely smiled and stepped away, now prepared to practice for the contest at the Prep Field.

"I better get practicing too then. These other trainers are going to have a leg up on me if I don’t," Amanda stated and walked into the crowd of contestants.

“Ralts, let’s show these people how it’s done!" she exclaimed and threw a Pokeball letting out Ralts. The Pokemon’s eyeless face looked around as if confused. Its helmet drooped and it placed a white hand up to hold it in place. Amanda then threw her other two Pokeballs revealing Skitty and Mudkip.

"You guys can watch; see what contest training is like for when you enter!" she grinned. The two Pokemon nodded. Skitty’s scarf flowed gently in the breeze and it purred as Mudkip’s wagging tail poked against it.

"Well Amanda, Jeff and I are going to head into town for something to eat," Mike informed his friend. Amanda nodded and headed deeper into the field with the other trainers.

"Look at all the Pokemon!" she said to her own Pokemon. A nearby black and devil-like Houndour leapt up and grabbed a Frisbee that its trainer threw.

"Ralts, let's work on a routine!' Amanda smiled. Ralts put its hand on its head again, signaling a prepared salute. Amanda leaned down and pulled out a pair of pompoms from her backpack. She then grabbed a set of two batons. She used these a lot in her cheerleading squad back in Bayside City, and thought that they might come in handy for contests.

“Now Ralts. When I toss these batons I want you to use confusion to keep them aloft. Got it?” Amanda explained. The tiny phychic type nodded and prepped its hands. Amanda’s arms swung up and released the batons. Soon, purple haze began to envelope them and they stopped suspended in midair. Skitty and Mudkip, who had been chasing each other around the field, stopped to admire this act.

***********

Mike and Jeff entered the city to find hordes of pedestrians talking in anticipation for the upcoming event. Flyers littered the area and small mobile stores were set up along the sandstone streets.

"I never knew contests where such big events," Jeff said as he peered at some Pokemon dolls at a nearby vendor. Children were begging their parents for things and money was being exchanged all around.

The two reached a diner called Rattata’s Roost to find a large commotion inside. Not only was the place almost completely full, even the sidewalk tables, but a chef was chasing something through the tables. Mike and Jeff couldn't make out what the chef was chasing. Jeff opened the door to walk in just as a black Pokemon darted out. It’s furry body was blowing hard as it pumped its tiny legs to get away from the fat chef with his curled mustache.

"Get back here you thief!" The cook yelled with a frying pan secured in his left hand. Jeff turned to get a better look at it as it darted down the road carrying a sausage link in its mouth. He pulled his Pokedex out and aimed it toward the creature.

"Poochyena; the bite Pokemon. At first site, Poochyena takes a bite out of anything that moves. This Pokemon chases after prey until the victim becomes exhausted. However, it may turn tail if the prey strikes back," the Pokedex muttered.

"A dark type!" Jeff exclaimed through a toothy grin. "I have to go Mike, be back later!"

Before his friend could interject, Jeff rushed down the street after the wolf pup, rounding a corner and disappearing from sight.

Mike was now alone in a street full of people in front of a restaurant. The chef sighed and retreated back into his shop. Mike sat down at the only available outdoor table and waited for the waitress to come.

"Need some company?" a young sixteen-year old girl asked. Mike looked up and inspected her. She had a weird helmet-like hat on covering dark brown hair. Her eyes were a light green and her nose was pointy. She had freckles all over her face, but she was surprisingly pretty. However, she had a disposition about her that Mike could only describe as a tomboy.

"The name's Caitlin, Caitlin Froit!" she introduced herself. "I saw your friend run off and thought I could be of company."

“Mike Strateri,” Mike smiled and pushed the seat opposite him open with his leg. She seemed nice enough, and Mike didn’t want to be seen at a restaurant alone. It would look creepy. She sat down across from him and smiled.

“So are you a contestee?" Mike asked trying to make conversation.

"Makin' up words now aren't we?" she replied while playing with the salt shaker on the table and blinking her large eyes. "Nope, I'm just here to watch. I'm actually a trainer that gets a kick out of viewing contests as I pass by. How about you, are you a ‘contestee’?"

She was obviously poking fun at his screw up of words.

"No, but my friend is. She's currently training with all the others in that field down the road, " Mike retorted.

“That thing that ran off was a she?" Caitlin asked appalled.

"Well, sometimes I wonder because it *****es like a she, but no, that's my other friend Jeff Flays. He likes dark types as you can see by the way he just took off after that Poochyena," Mike laughed.

"Ah, so there’s a ‘contestee’ and a ‘darkie’! So what does that make you, a ‘dineree’?" Caitlin smirked, still having fun with Mike’s word choices.

"Nah, I'm a trainer," Mike replied.

"A trainer? Well then, we have to have a little match, don't we? Sorry, but it's my rule. Challenge every trainer you meet, I always say!" she grinned.

"Sure, it doesn't look like we'll be getting service anytime soon anyways," Mike said loudly so that a nearby waitress could hear. Caitlin stood up and he quickly followed her down the sandstone sidewalk.

**********

Ralts was now getting the hang of Amanda's routine. Amanda juggled her pompoms and did random flips as Ralts twirled the batons in midair.

"This is perfect; you're really getting good at this!" Amanda grinned.

"Yeah, for a beginner!" she heard someone say behind her. Amanda turned to see a tall boy with long blonde hair. His eyes were dark blue and his face was pale. He seemed quite old, maybe eighteen or nineteen. A bipedal Pokemon was at his feet. It was tan colored and sported markings of stars and stripes all over its body. In its hand was a spoon and its tail bushed out before coming to a tip. This was a Kadabra.

"So, you're entering the smart contest I see? You think you can beat me?" he asked with a grin. He then threw dozens of spoons into the air. Kadabra quickly went into action. It caught every spoon with its mind and bent them with kinesis, allowing them to rattle against the ground one by one after.

"Wow, you're good!" Amanda stated with wide eyes.

"Of course, I've won every smart contest I've competed in!" he laughed. "The name's Alan Merlin."

"Amanda Belicina," Amanda replied.

"I hate to admit it girl, but you don’t seem much of a threat to me. No one here does," he suddenly stated. He tried to sound polite, but Amanda could tell he got satisfaction out of saying it.

Before she could respond, he turned his attention to the other trainers.

"That girl's Starmie's figure is all off. That Meditite couldn't win if it was Einstein! And don't even get me started on the Spoink!" he explained before continuing, "And you, well you're a beginner. I can tell because you smell of it," he said looking at Ralts.

"We'll just have to see when the contest time comes!" Amanda replied and turned away. Alan nodded and he and Kadabra headed off, disappearing into the crowd of contestants. Amanda and Ralts began to practice some more. Skitty and Mudkip continued to play.

*********

Team Steam finally exited the Tearer Forest, battered and bruised.

"Nice idea Clyde!" Bonnie moaned exhaustedly.

"How did I know ghosts like rundown houses?" her companion replied. The two had come to Sandstone City and were now passing the Prep Field where many trainers were practicing.

"They look so strong, but I'm just not in the mood to steal!" Bonnie complained. Clyde nodded and they continued into the city.

********

"Electrike, dodge!" Mike yelled. The Pokemon shot out of the way as the small pink puffball known as a Jigglypuff rolled towards it. "Another rollouter. I just faced one in Burgundy City!"

"Jigglypuff, use take down!" Caitlin yelled. The Pokemon opened up from its roll, its big green eyes blinking slightly, and smashed into Electrike with its body. After some time, Jigglypuff flew back in recoil.

"Electrike, use spark!" Mike commanded as the electric Pokemon landed on its feet. Electrike let off the attack and the electricity drowned the puffy Pokemon in cackling sparks. A little dazed, Jigglypuff began to stumble.

"Now use tackle!" Mike yelled. Electrike raced toward Jigglypuff, but the pink puffball soaked in air from its tiny mouth and floated away at the last second.

"Double slap!" Caitlin commanded. Jigglypuff came down hard and smacked away at Electrike‘s face. The electric type panted as its mouth began to bruise. It finally managed to back away as Jigglypuff tired.

"Quick attack!" Mike yelled. Electrike slammed into Jigglypuff face first, blowing it back. “Now follow up with howl!”

Electrike let out an echoing call that gave it a much needed confidence boost.

“Jigglypuff, sing!” Caitlin ordered. Her Pokemon closed its eyes and began to wobble its stubby hands are it let off a soothing melody. Mike found himself becoming increasingly drowsy. Electrike swayed where it stood before collapsing. A tiny snot bubble expanded and contracted from its nostril.

“Not cool!” Mike responded. He had no idea how to counter a sleeping tactic as he had never come across it yet.

“And now, we win! Jigglypuff, rollout!” The balloon Pokemon spun on its side again, increasing speed as it rolled into Electrike. The Pokemon toppled back and instantly woke up. Mike smiled. He got lucky, but he knew it was only because Electrike was too energetic to stay asleep for that long. His other Pokemon might not be so responsive.

“Sing again!” Caitlin told her Pokemon.

“Leer!” Mike commanded. As Jigglypuff closed its eyes to sing, Electrike gave a piercing yelp that struck Jigglypuff and softened it up. “Now, spark!”

Electrike growled angrily as its back hairs stood up. The sparks popped away on its back and it released the electricity, the ball of sparks enveloping Jigglypuff. When the attack ceased, the balloon Pokemon slumped down.

"Return!" Caitlin said as she recalled it. "Impressive, but that was just a warm up! Time for my strongest Pokemon! Go Skarmory!" she said throwing the Pokeball. It opened and a large metal bird towered over Electrike. It‘s body was completely made of steel and its wings were like groups of steak knives.

**********

Meanwhile, Jeff was searching the city for the little lost Poochyena. "I know you didn't get far little guy!" he muttered as he searched street after street. He finally connected sight with it on the opposing sidewalk of the street that led to Sand Gale Stadium. It was happily eating the sausage links it stole as crowds of people walked by.

Jeff stepped into the street to go after it, but was suddenly surrounded by a marching band.

"What the hell?" he stammered as a tuba player blew his instrument into the confused teen’s face. The band played on and soon Jeff saw a gigantic Dragonite float towering over him. He ducked back into the sidewalk, now aware that he had stepped into a parade.

"What a time for a parade! Go away so I can cross the street and get my Pokemon!" he yelled. With an angry look, he pulled a broken piece of sandstone from the sidewalk and chucked it at the Dragonite float, puncturing a hole in it.

"Crap!" He said and ran into the alley to hide. The large balloon whined as air exited from just under its left wing. The people holding the strings below began to scream as the massive float descended upon them. Chaos rang out everywhere as pedestrians fled the scene.

***********

Amanda had since left the Prep Field and was now in front of the Sand Gale Stadium. She heard a commotion coming from down the street, but was too intent on getting into the hall. The building was large and made entirely out of everything else in the city: sandstone. On the roof was a sandstone carving of a contest ribbon. A breeze blew by the steps that she stood on causing some sand to flow across her feet. She opened the large glass doors and walked into the lobby where a young black-haired woman was sitting behind a desk.

She handed the woman her official Contest Card and was told the smart contest started at four P.M, which was about two hours away.

"They said they'd be here to watch me!" Amanda said to herself as she looked around for her friends. She sighed and then headed for her dressing room.

***********

"Skarmory, use drill peck!" Caitlin roared. Electrike was being butchered, and it was now unable to avoid the attack. The bird’s spinning beak drilled into the tiny Pokemon and sent it sprawling across the ground. It didn’t get back up.

"Great job Electrike, take a good rest!" Mike said recalling it.

"One more Pokemon left for you!" Caitlin grinned.

"Taillow can't hurt Skarmory’s metal body, so Torchic would be a great bet!" Mike thought and threw the Pokeball. His Pokemon formed in a flash of light, but something was rather odd about it. It didn't stop glowing to take its shape and it seemed to be growing…

***********

Jeff peaked out of the alleyway to find the parade staff hauling away the remains of the once beautiful balloon. The Poochyena was nowhere to be found, but he wasn't about to give up. He casually strolled out into the street as a woman spotted him.

"That’s the guy who wrecked the float!" she screamed pointing a fat finger in his direction. Jeff stopped whistling and waved bye as he shot off down the road. The parade staff all began to give chase.

***********

Torchic was no longer Torchic. Mike was now staring at a fully evolved Pokemon! It was bipedal with thick legs and clawed hand-like wings. Its face was long and ended in the familiar crest that Torchic sported, yet this Pokemon seemed built more for fighting than its predecessor.

"You evolved?" Mike said in shock. He was taught all about evolution before and even witnessed Jeff’s Nuzleaf’s evolution, but something about his own Pokemon evolving filled him with wonder. He pulled his Pokedex out without even knowing it and scanned the creature.

"Combusken; the young fowl Pokemon. Combusken toughens up its legs and thighs by running through fields and mountains. This Pokemon's legs possess both speed and power, enabling it to dole out ten kicks in one second," the Pokedex stated.

"That victory over Dusclops must have done it!" Mike recollected excitedly, remembering Torchic’s lucky burn on the fully evolved ghost.

"Wow, your Torchic evolved, can we get this battle over with?" Caitlin asked impatiently. Her voice was filled with worry though, as if this was completely unexpected.

"Hey, this is an exciting moment for me! This is my first Pokemon to evolve!" Mike yelled back. "You ready to kick some Skarmory butt?" Combusken nodded and leapt up, doing a back flip and landing nearer to Skarmory.

"Combusken, use double kick!" Mike yelled, knowing that this fowl Pokemon was a natural born fighter. The Pokemon prepped its feet and pushed off the ground, rising up towards its opponent. It let out a barrage of kicks, but Skarmory did well to dodge a few. Some hit, but only for minor damage.

"Skarmory, use drill peck again!" Caitlin ordered. The bird backed away and drilled into Combusken, flinging it back and dealing a lot of damage. Combusken landed on the ground with a bruise on its chin, but it leapt up for more.

"Combusken, use focus energy!" Mike yelled. The Pokemon stopped and closed its eyes.

"Now Skarmory, attack it with steel wing whilst it's still!" Caitlin roared. The Pokemon flew down towards Combusken with its wings glowing, but Combusken leapt away.

"Ember!" Mike yelled. Combusken launched the flaming balls, each striking Skarmory hard. It fell down, but wasn't out.

"Metal sound!" Caitlin yelled.

Skarmory let out a large crushing ring that struck Combusken. Mike held his ears and winced in pain. It sounded as if someone was scratching two pieces of steel together.

"Ha, metal sound murders Combusken's focus and causes it to not focus on defense!" Caitlin yelled over the bone crushing noise. "Steel wing while it's hurting!"

Skarmory smashed into Combusken with its wing flinging it back. Combusken weakly got up. "Again!" Caitlin yelled. Skarmory turned and headed straight back to Combusken.

"Use quick attack!" Mike told it. The Pokemon dodged Skarmory and smashed into it, only to be flung back.

"Bulk up!" Mike tried. Combusken flexed its muscles to give itself more power and regain some defensive bulk.

"Not going to do you any good! Skarmory, use swift!" Caitlin laughed. The stars that exited the steel bird’s mouth struck Combusken and it flew back.

"Combusken, get up!" Mike yelled. The Pokemon slowly rose and glared at Skarmory. All four combatants were exhausted.

"Skarmory, use steel wing!" Caitlin commanded. Skarmory flew at Combusken.

"Flamethrower!" Mike yelled. Combusken twirled its legs to move out of the way and let off the flaming stream. It struck Skarmory hard and it fell to the ground, dirt and dust flying everywhere.

"While it's down, use double kick!" Mike ordered. Combusken jumped on the grounded Pokemon and beat it with its feet, and then leapt away. Skarmory was down and it was not getting up.

"Return!" Caitlin said in disbelief. As soon as Skarmory was recalled, Combusken collapsed to the ground.

"Take a rest buddy!" Mike said recalling it in a red flash of light.

"Great battle!" Caitlin smiled. Mike gave her a thumbs up.

“You almost beat me,” he said.

“Yeah, but Combusken was too good,” Caitlin replied. Mike then looked at his Pokenav to see that it was 3:45 P.M. He needed to get to Sand Gale Stadium fast.

"Amanda is waiting for me at the contest hall, I have to go! I‘m late!" he stuttered. Caitlin nodded and followed him down the road.

Mike made it just in time. He and Caitlin took their seats in the stands as a boy with blonde hair was showing off his Kadabra. Little did he know that this was Amanda's biggest competitor. Jeff was nowhere in sight.

Alan flung dozens of spoons in the air. Each was caught with a psychic and bent with kinesis by Kadabra. Alan then did a summersault and was lifted into the air by Kadabra. Kadabra began to juggle the spoons and its trainer, impressing the judges and making the audience go wild. Alan then finished by landing on his feet and having Kadabra teleport onto his head. The crowd applauded and Alan bowed. The judges gave him a score of 9.0, 9.3, and an 8.9; giving him a total score of 27.2/30. He stepped off stage and gave Amanda a nice smirk as she waited nervously in the on deck hall. It was now her turn to show her stuff. She was very nervous, but as she walked on stage, she saw Mike in the stands.

"He made it!" She smiled and stepped out into the ring with Ralts at her side. Mike gave her a surprising amount of confidence. She would show him what she was made of. She would make her best friend proud…

Next Chapter- Chapter 13: Beginner's Luck or a Harsh Defeat? The final Outcome!
Does Amanda have what it takes to win her first contest? And can Jeff find the Poochyena? Find out in the next chapter!

FlamingRuby
29th August 2005, 7:34 PM
I'll just say that jeff is always a riot...and congrats to Mike on gaining an evolved Pokemon.

Sike Saner
29th August 2005, 8:08 PM
Well, I must say, Combusken versus Skarmory was a fairly entertaining match. Also entertaining was Jeff incurring the wrath of an entire parade...now, who else could have done that?

Then there were these things in particular:


“Hold your tongue woman. I shouldn’t tell you this, but because it will make me look smart and you like a *******, I will comply. Yes, I, the miraculous Jeff, have discovered the location of the Preparation Field. Amanda, being the total ***** she is, did not look to see what else was in the field, and instead proceeded to criticize my very good eye. For you see, there is also a booth near where the forest meets the field. Look Amanda, do you see? DO YOU SEE?” Jeff asked her while smiling from ear to ear and putting his arm tightly around her shoulders. “And what does the sign say above the booth? REGISTRATION FOR CONTESTANTS! Say it again with me Amanda. REGISTRATION FOR CONTESTANTS!”

That was yet another classic moment, of course, but then there was this:


"What the hell?" he stammered as a tuba player blew his instrument into the confused teen’s face.

...That just brought a curiously funny mental image, as in, even funnier than it was probably intended to be.

GoldenNoctowl77
30th August 2005, 12:48 AM
Flaming Ruby- The short and sweet reviewer! Yep, Jeff was funny as ever and Mik's Pokemon evolved. I felt it was the right time for the little chicken to grow up.

Sike Saner- Yeah, I felt Combusken vs Skarmory was one of my better battles. Yeah, I broadened the parade scandal from the original. It happened in it, but it was so poorly described. The original pretty much said,

"Jeff walked into the street and was surrounded by a marching band. He backed away and tossed a rock at a Dragonite float, blowing it up."

It wasn't anymore developed and so I cleaned that up a lot. Your other two quotes were also added to spice up the chapter and bring more humor. Ha, yeah, dirty minds could think the instrument was something else :p. Thanx for the review.

MORE PEOPLE REVIEW!!!

FlamingRuby
30th August 2005, 12:57 AM
The tuba bit was hilarious...even more so if Jeff had also been the recipient of cymbals in the face! ::bets money the band was probably playing "76 Trombones"::

GoldenNoctowl77
30th August 2005, 7:39 PM
Just making you all aware that chapter 13 will be up tonight. Check back soon!

I would like a little more reviews on Chapter 12 though :/

indigestible_wad
30th August 2005, 8:16 PM
Hopefully I've posted this before the new chapter is out, but either way.

a deep tan-colored brick that was ironically called sandstone.
I think that would be better if it was "a deep tan-colored brick that was obviously sandstone." Just sounds better.

“Leer!” Mike commanded. As Jigglypuff closed its eyes to sing, Electrike gave a piercing yelp that struck Jigglypuff and softened it up. “Now, spark!”
Leer is not a sound move.

Jeff is a weirdo. I really have nothing else to say.

IceKing
30th August 2005, 9:18 PM
Stop updating so fast! I need time!


“I think it’s a **** hole. Who the hell makes a town out of such a crappy rock? Most people settle for bricks and cement!” Jeff interrupted with his opinion.

What was teh curse originally supposed to be? BTW, you can overcome the swear filter by makign one of the letters in the word verdana.


Jeff cut in. His bony finger was extended to their left.

Eh, I didnt like the way those two sentences worked together. I think it woudl be better if you used with.


Amanda broke loose of her friend’s grip and stared at him, her eyes blank and stupefied. She wanted to hit him so hard; give him an uppercut to the chin and watch his head explode. However, he was right and she was wrong regardless of how she didn’t want to admit it. And besides, he may have been an *** about it, but he was her friend, and in actuality, he was just trying to help in his unorthodox methods. She would have to let it slide.

It apepars that your trying to develop Amanda and Jeff's relationship in this chapter, development is always good!


The Pokemon’s eyeless face looked around as if confused

Correct me if Im wrong, but doesnt Ralts have two small black dots as eyes?



She had a weird helmet-like hat on covering dark brown hair. Her eyes were a light green and her nose was pointy. She had freckles all over her face, but she was surprisingly pretty. However, she had a disposition about her that Mike could only describe as a tomboy.


Nice description, but make sure you dont use too many personal pronouns



"Ah, so there’s a ‘contestee’ and a ‘darkie’! So what does that make you, a ‘dineree’?" Caitlin smirked, still having fun with Mike’s word choices.


I can easily see that Caitlin is no 2d pokemon anime filler girl, she definely has some spice and flavor to her.



"I hate to admit it girl, but you don’t seem much of a threat to me. No one here does," he suddenly stated. He tried to sound polite, but Amanda could tell he got satisfaction out of saying it.


I REMEMBER HIM! Ugg, hes a typical arragont rival but Im pretty sure that he isnt as jerky next time he comes.


“Leer!” Mike commanded. As Jigglypuff closed its eyes to sing, Electrike gave a piercing yelp that struck Jigglypuff and softened it up. “Now, spark!”

Since when is leer a yelp? Hmm?


"Crap!" He said and ran into the alley to hide. The large balloon whined as air exited from just under its left wing. The people holding the strings below began to scream as the massive float descended upon them. Chaos rang out everywhere as pedestrians fled the scene.

One word, ROFTLMFAO!!!!!!!!!


It didn't stop glowing to take its shape and it seemed to be growing…
Woah...fast evolution! THen again, usually in HOeen trainer fics the pokemon does evolve around the first gym battle.


"Ha, metal sound murders Combusken's focus and causes it to not focus on defense!"

Hmm, I think this would be more well suited in the narration cus if a person keeps explaining whats going on, its kinda of stereotypical.



Im glad to know that you stuck with anime style contests since they are my absolute favorites. I can hardly wait for next chapter! I noticed how the start of this chapter seemed to talk about Amanda and Jeff but thhat kind of faded away into nothingness as the two seperated. The whoel exploding float thing was simply marvelous, as I said in my last qoutation try not to have charachters explain too much in battle. I woudl have preffered a Mike loss concidering how he never lost I believe.

Ladyumbra
30th August 2005, 9:38 PM
I return with a good dela of happiness. ermm i have nothign helpfullto say this chapter really i don't . gimme my pineapple ^-^

i do like jeff as normal his antics aren't intentionally bad but they always cause trouble.

GoldenNoctowl77
30th August 2005, 10:55 PM
Well, as promised, here's chapter 13.

Chapter 13: Beginner's Luck or a Harsh Failure? The Final Outcome!

The streets of Sandstone City were practically deserted now that the Sand Gale Stadium Pokemon Contest had begun. Loud cheering could be heard from the audience as contestants showed off what they had. The sandy roads, however, were only treated to the blowing wind and random traveling trash that came with it.

Bonnie and Clyde peeked around a corner building from a back alley. When they saw that the coast was clear, the two villains strolled causally onto the sidewalk. They were heading down the road to a small drug store known as Petey’s. Townspeople relied heavily on this place for small needs, yet they had absolutely no clue that its storage room housed a check-in base for Team Steam to contact their leaders.

“Let’s make this quick,” Bonnie told her companion while pushing open the door. A bell dinged and the two were greeted by Petey Demunie, the store owner. His fat body was covered in dirty clothes and a grease spattered apron. It was hard to tell if the grease was from food or his sweaty gray hair. Petey was a member of Team Aqua long before he retired and opened this particular convenience store.

"Ahh, If it isn’t Bonnie Delcovo! It’s been a long time!” he said enthusiastically while stepping out from behind the counter. Bonnie gave a fake smile. Petey was a nice guy, but his bad hygiene was a real turn off.

“And who is this young chap?” Petey asked looking around his friend and noticing Clyde.

"There is no time for chat Mr. Demunie. Kindly take us to the back room!" Bonnie replied. Petey’s mouth drooped as if he was disappointed. He then nodded and grabbed a key from a shelf above the counter. He waddled over to what looked like a wall towards the back freezers; however, there was a small latch that opened a small section of the drywall to reveal a keyhole. He placed the tiny key into the socket and turned it, listening to the click it made. He then pushed opened the unlocked wall and placed a hand inside, signaling that the two team members were clear to enter.

"There you are missy!" he remarked with less enthusiasm than before.

“Thank you Petey,” Bonnie replied and walked into the small, damp room. The area was littered with soggy boxes of rotting meat and many containers of liquor. There were some empty beer bottles on the floor also, indicating that Petey used this room for more than storage. Two video phones were stationed on opposing racks on each side of the room. Clyde closed the door behind them and glared angrily at Bonnie.

“Why didn’t you introduce me?” he inquired. Bonnie let out a sigh.

“Does it matter?” she replied.

“Yes, you never introduce Clyde Lavago, the best friend that you have! You’re ashamed of me aren’t you?” Clyde concluded with shocked eyes.

“If that excuse will end this conversation faster, then yes, I am ashamed of you,” Bonnie remarked. “There’s your video phone. Call your leader and let’s get this over with!”

The two gave each other dirty looks and then proceeded to each phone.

"Bonnie reporting in!" Bonnie said as her boss’s face appeared on the monitor. It was pale and angry. His thick beard looked untrimmed and spots of black hair were poking out from under his bandana.

"Clyde here!" Clyde said as Maxie appeared on screen. His face was as expressionless as always and his piercing red eyes were fixed on Clyde.

"How is everything going?" Maxie spoke at once, as if he wanted this to end as quickly as his grunt did.

"Splendidly! We are on the tail of who you believe are the ones who can grant us access to the shrine!" Bonnie said to Archie when she was asked the same question.

"Good!" Archie replied while scratching at his beard. "Now, do not, under any circumstances, let the trainers know what your goal is. It would shatter everything."

“Of course sir! I would never dream of destroying your plans!” Bonnie sucked up. She noticed that her companion was talking rather low. She could tell he was nervous because his whispers were interrupted by an occasional squeal from his throat.

“Do you have any other information to report in?” Archie asked causing Bonnie to spin back to her phone.

“No sir,” she stammered.

“Then this is where I leave you. Keep up the good work,” her boss said and his face faded from the screen. Bonnie breathed a sigh of relief and turned to see that Clyde was fumbling to hang up his video phone.

"Well, back to the streets! We have to find those morons and keep on their tail," Bonnie remarked. They turned and left, locking the door behind them.

*********

In a small compound somewhere in Viridian City, Archie hung up his video phone and turned to the red haired man beside him.

"Do you think they suspect anything?" he asked as his guest clasped his own hands together and shook his head.

"They are too nitwitted to know of our true intentions," Maxie, Archie’s visitor, replied with a grin that quickly formed back into his stern disposition.

"Do not be so sure! This is a very serious matter; we cannot take these things lightly!" an accented voice said. It was now obvious that a third companion had entered the room during their conversation. Archie and Maxie stiffened up and peered at him with utmost respect. This person was above everyone, and he would soon be above the world. He leaned himself against a wall and wiped some dust off of his orange coat. He then began to speak again whilst pushing his graying black hair back.

"We are not ready yet, but the last assault of our teams will soon begin," the voice stated with a boisterous laugh. "The Pokewar is coming, and they will all know soon enough!"

With that, the three members of the room gave off devilish grins…

**********

Amanda was now stationed in the middle of the white ring of the show floor. The audience’s massive cheers rang out over the stadium. Some clapped and others even stamped their feet. Mike stood up and whistled.

Ralts waddled up next to its trainer and placed a stubby hand on her leg. It seemed a bit confused about what was going on. A dark-skinned woman walked up to join Amanda on stage. She held a microphone in her right hand and was twirling her hair in a ditzy fashion with the left one.

“And now I’d like to introduce you all to Amanda Belicina from Bayside City. This is Amanda’s first Pokemon Contest, so let’s all give her an extra boost of confidence! Can I here a yee-haw?” the announcer exclaimed and placed her hand in the air.

“Yee-haw!” the crowd yelled together. Amanda was a little perplexed as to the reason for the gesture, but she decided to get it out of her mind.

"Beginners are always favored in contests!" Caitlin whispered to Mike as he retook his seat. He nodded and continued to watch.

"Amanda, will you kindly begin your routine for us?" the announcer asked. Amanda smiled nervously and gave a nod. She then pulled two batons from her pockets and twirled them a bit in her fingers. Ralts arched its back and cocked its head in preparation for the routine. Amanda crossed her hands then flung them back into position while tossing the batons.

Ralts caught the spinning poles in mid-flight and began to twirl them with confusion. Amanda did a cartwheel to the front of the stage and landed on her feet. She then placed her hands behind herself and pulled two blue pompoms out. She began to do a cheer show while Ralts spun the batons around her.

The crowd seemed to be enjoying the routine. Ralts smiled and began to spin the batons faster; now having them leap over its trainer one by one. Ralts tried to do some summersaults as it controlled the batons, but its helmet bonked against the ground as it did. The batons slowly descended but the dazed Pokemon managed to regain its concentration before they hit the stage.

“Oh, Amanda’s Ralts is trying to do some stunts that are way over its head,” the announcer commented. Amanda was now a little nervous. Her Pokemon was doing the best it could, but that little mess up might have cost them some big points. She pushed it to the back of her mind and tossed her pompoms above her.

Still controlling the batons, Ralts used disable, freezing the pompoms as they flew in a flash of orange light. Amanda leapt up and held on to the handles, suspended in the air on the frozen pompoms. The crowd went wild, some laughing hysterically. Amanda then spun herself over the pompoms and Ralts broke off the disable, allowing her to grip the items in mid-flip. She finished her spin and landed, feet planted firmly on the ground and the pompoms still in her hands. Ralts flicked its arms and the batons rushed to it. It caught them and did another somersault, this time pulling it off and stopping in front of its trainer.

The crowd applauded loudly and Mike stood up once again.

"Wow she's good; one of the best beginners I have ever seen!" Caitlin told Mike while joining him in his standing position.

“Well let’s hear another cheer for Amanda!” the announcer giggled as the crowd continued their applause. “And what do the judges have to say about this wonderful show?”

Amanda watched as an old man with gray hair pushed a button. He gave her a 9.3. A very short man with a dome shaped haircut gave her a 9.2, and the local Nurse Joy gave her a 9.0; giving her a total of 27.5 out of 30! Amanda was in shock! She actually out-staged Alan and Kadabra! She took a bow and quickly left the stadium. Mike got up and Caitlin and him headed to her dressing room.

**********

Jeff was now running as fast as his legs could carry him. He ducked into another alleyway as the parade staff ran by. Each one was screaming random insults as they did. No one took any notice to him.

"Phew!" he whispered a sigh of relief and leaned against the sandstone wall. It was then that he heard a low growl coming from behind him. He turned to see the Poochyena he had been chasing staring directly at him from deeper in the alley. It was in a cardboard box with a small blanket and Jeff could tell he had invaded its home.

He pushed himself away from the wall and tiptoed backward from the alley. The Poochyena’s teeth bared and it followed the invader.

Jeff quickly spun around and started to book it down the street, sand flying up from his feet as he went. Poochyena barked viciously as it chased the scared teen.

"Oh great, I'm going to be eaten alive by a puppy! That or arrested for killing a balloon!" Jeff screamed as he sprinted along the road. The Poochyena was gaining and would be on him in moments. Jeff’s crappy childhood started to filter through his mind when he suddenly recalled the Pokedex entry.

With a sudden turn he was facing Poochyena. It stopped dead in its tracks and yelped as Jeff charged right back at it.

"RAAAR!" he screamed. “The tables have turned pooch!”

Poochyena put its tail between its legs and ran off, whimpering as it went. Jeff was amused by his quick thinking but soon remembered that he was trying to catch the Pokemon.

“Damnit, come back pooch!” he yelled and chased after the terrified dog.

**********

The final contestant had just finished off his routine with his Pidgeotto and round one came to a close. The scores were all tallied up and the announcer returned to the stage, her pink dress flowing along it as she went.

“Well, the scores for round one have been tallied up and I’m pleased to announce that Amanda Belicina had the best appeal score! It’s not very common to see a beginner come out on top for the appeal round, so let’s here it for this determined trainer!” the woman declared. The crowd cheered again and then calmed down for her to speak once more.

“Now, if you all remember, before the round began I told you to inspect the Pokemon. Now is the time to take the voter machines from under your chairs and cast your vote for the best looking Pokemon,” the announcer informed the crowd.

Mike leaned down and pulled a contraption out that resembled a Pokenav. A list of all the contestants’ Pokemon was displayed on the tiny monitor. Mike flicked his finger against Ralts and the screen changed to a big thank you message.

“Are all the votes in?” Hurry up,” the announcer said and walked over to the judging desk. She was handed a freshly printed letter and soon returned on stage. “Well, you voted and we listened. The winner of the audience favorite is Alan’s Kadabra. Alan is awarded extra points for this round, which pushes Amanda down to second place. The top four combatants will all make it to the next round though, so don’t despair!”

Amanda was a little disappointed to see that she was pushed down a rank, but she wasn’t going to let it bother her. She watched the monitor from her dressing room while waiting for the next round. Mike and Caitlin walked in slowly and greeted her.

"Did you see me Mike?" Amanda wondered and stood up. Mike nodded.

"You were awesome!" he replied.

"Yeah! I‘ve never seen such a spectacular show from a first-timer," Caitlin grinned. "What a good 'contestee'."

Mike could tell she would never let that down.

"Who's this?" Amanda asked.

“This is Caitlin Froit,” Mike introduced them. "And her battle got me a Combusken!"

“Awesome, nice job Mike!” Amanda congratulated him. Suddenly, a familiar blonde haired boy and his Kadabra waddled into the scene.

"Great show rookie!" he grinned. "But the next round is mine. Your puny new Pokemon can't beat Kadabra in a battle appeal."

"We’ll just see!" Amanda replied. Alan flicked his hair back and left the room.

“Wow, that kid’s an ***,” Caitlin smirked.

“Yeah, and he’s trying too hard to look good. It makes him too feminine,” Mike added in. Amanda shook her head with laughter.

***********

Jeff had now cornered the small Poochyena in another back alley. It whimpered and stared up at him with big red and yellow eyes while pushing itself against an old wooden fence. Jeff couldn’t help but feel some pity for the pathetic creature. The pity soon faded though and he pulled out a Pokeball.

"Sorry chap, but you were born a dark type, so that makes you mine!" he declared while juggling the ball in his palm. Suddenly, a hand reached through a small hole in the fence behind Poochyena and grabbed it. Jeff saw this and leapt, grabbing the Pokemon by the paws. The hand tried to pull away, but Jeff tugged back. What came next was a tug of war with Poochyena as the rope. It yelped again, and Jeff pulled harder. With one final jerk, the person on the other end came crashing through the fence. She landed with a thud on the ground and released Poochyena.

"Bonbon! I should've known!" Jeff yelled. Bonnie stood up holding her head as Clyde walked in behind her.

“My name is Bonnie you retard! Do you even listen?” she riposted.

"Of course I do Bobo,” Jeff answered.

“That Poochyena is mine! I saw it first!" Bonnie then remarked.

"Fat chance hoe, I've been following it all around the city. Thanks to it I'm a wanted felon!" Jeff replied.

"Join the club! What did you do?" Clyde wondered, his voice well out of character.

"Murder of a balloon!" Jeff smirked.

"Wow, that is a horrid act! I tip my hat off to you sir," Clyde replied. While they talked, the Poochyena high-tailed it out of there. After a bit of conversation, Jeff noticed it was missing.

"Good job, now it's gone!" he yelled. Bonnie folded her arms.

"Not my fault!" she exclaimed. Jeff pushed her aside and ran off, leaving Team Steam shocked.

************

The contestants were now placed on a board and shuffled to see who would face who in round two. Amanda saw her picture appear next to a young girl with her hair curled into a long black ponytail. The girl's face was trying too hard to smile and her ears were extremely big. Her Pokemon was a purple, star-shaped creature with a gem in its core. It was known as a Starmie.

Alan was paired with the blonde boy and his Pidgeotto.

"Hope you make it to the finals rookie so I can show you how it's done!" Alan told Amanda as the two walked into the arena again. Amanda shot him a look as he walked away.

“Amanda and Hailey, please step up to the appeal arena if you please,” the announcer said and motioned the two to a battlefield with a scoreboard on the wall near it. Each trainer’s picture was on it. Their Pokemon also had a photograph that was placed next to a yellow bar. Amanda had learned that each trainer had to battle one another, and when an attack connected, the bar would drop. It was much more complicated however, as the bar dropped more depending on the intelligence shown during the attack. Various combos could also help.

Amanda walked up to her side of the stadium as Hailey took to the other end, her smile as crooked as ever.

"In this contest, each trainer will have a five minute battle. During this time, the trainers may only use smart attacks, which in turn must strike the opponent to score. The trainer with the most stats left at the end of the time limit wins!" the announcer explained. Five minutes was placed on the clock above the stat bars.

“Begin!” the announcer signaled.

"Ok Ralts, begin with calm mind!" Amanda shouted. Ralts nodded and began to relax.

"Camouflage!" Hailey cried out. Starmie’s core glowed so bright that the Pokemon disappeared, reforming with a glossy coat and a new elemental type. The crowd was in awe by this act.

"Confusion!" Amanda commanded. Ralts placed a hand on its head and let off the attack, striking Starmie in a cloud of purple haze. Hailey looked at her dropping bar but didn’t seem too worried. It had only dropped a tiny bit.

"Nice combo! That should give you extra points in the end tally," the flat headed judge stated. Amanda smiled at him.

"Starmie, use psychic!" Hailey announced. Starmie struck Ralts with a much stronger attack, blowing it back and taking a fourth of its stat bar away. Amanda looked worried. No matter how good Ralts was, Starmie was stronger, and its bar would be harder to drop. She then thought up a plan that would buy her a little time and save her from another psychic blast.

"Ralts, use disable!" she roared. Ralts let off the attack, freezing Starmie with an orange glow and dropping its stat bar a bit.

"Oh, looks like Starmie won't be using psychic for a while!" the announcer remarked.

Amanda noticed that only two minutes were remaining on the clock. She had to take a more offensive route while destroying Starmie’s offense in the process. It was the only way to win.

"Now Ralts, use imprison!" Amanda roared. Ralts’s helmeted head began to rattle and Starmie shook as psychic energy wrapped itself around the star-shaped Pokemon. Its stat bar was dropping significantly.

"Wow, what an amazing show of smartness!" the announcer roared. There was now only several seconds left and Amanda thought she had it in the bag.

"Hidden power!" Hailey conducted her Pokemon. Starmie let loose the attack, blowing Ralts back with a show of bubbly spheres and dropping its stat bar a lot. The clock ran out and Ralts’s bar was distinctly lower than Starmie’s.

Amanda couldn't believe it. She had lost! All this and she had lost! Suddenly, Starmie's stat bar dropped lower and put her in first.

"Oh, surprise folks, Amanda had a combo during the match which takes extra stat points away from the opponent! Amanda is our winner!" the announcer grinned as if she herself caused the dramatic change. The crowd went wild and Amanda stood in shock.

"I did it," she whispered. She then looked up on the screen to see it was down to the final match, and she was up against Alan…

***********

Jeff rushed into the street avoiding a few parade staff members as he went. Poochyena was panting in the middle of the sidewalk just a few feet in front of him. It growled when it saw him, but he wasn't backing down this time. Jeff threw a Pokeball releasing Treecko.

"Use quick attack!" he yelled. The gecko Pokemon slammed into Poochyena, flinging it back.

"Ha, not so tough after you've been running for hours!" Jeff laughed. Poochyena retaliated with bite, clamping onto Treecko's tail.

"You sneaky little butt!" Jeff roared. Treecko frantically tried to remove the pup, but it wouldn't give. Jeff grew bored and walked up, yawning in the process. He grabbed Poochyena and ripped it from Treecko's tail. He then placed it back down and returned to the sidelines.

"Dude, bad doggie,” he stated after interrupting the battle. Poochyena lunged at him, but Treecko smashed it away. It landed on the ground spinning and didn’t get up.

“This sounds really stupid,” Jeff told Treecko while pulling a Pokeball from his belt, “but Pokeball go!”

Poochyena was sucked inside by a red light and the ball wiggled frantically before clicking into place.

"Great job Treecko! You helped me get my first true dark type!" Jeff yelled. The Pokemon nodded and Jeff picked up the ball.

"Oh crap, the contest!" Jeff suddenly remembered when he saw the stadium down the street. He took off running with Treecko following close behind.

**********

Amanda and Alan glared at each other from opposite sides of the battlefield.

“Ready noob?” Alan asked her, his face filled with confidence. Amanda didn’t answer. She didn’t want to give him the satisfaction.

The clock began and each trainer started their commands. "Kinesis!" Alan yelled. The attack was launched and Ralts became dazed from the psychic invasion of its mind.

"Ralts, use confusion!" Amanda yelled. Ralts let off the attack, but Kadabra easily pulled out of the purple energy.

"Now teleport!" Amanda concocted. Ralts did so and appeared behind Kadabra.

"Kadabra, use psychic!" Alan yelled. The Pokemon pushed out a finger, grabbing Ralts with its mind and lifting it. It then tossed Ralts aside. This whole display had already taken two minutes from the clock and Amanda had yet to score a single point. Ralts's stat bar was running low.

"Sorry Amanda, but this is over!" Alan roared. "Psybeam!"

Kadabra launched the rainbow of psychic energy, but Ralts teleported again.

"Future sight!" Alan yelled as Ralts appeared behind Kadabra. Kadabra closed its eyes and foresaw the attack…

***********

Jeff was almost there; the contest was just ahead. He reached the main gate but was suddenly pulled back by a feminine hand. It belonged to a blue haired police woman. Her sleek body was contained in a uniform that sported a very pleasant skirt. She was beautiful, but right now she looked angry.

"Ok float wrecker, you're going downtown,” Officer Jenny had a tight hold on him.

"Damnit!" He yelled as he was dragged away kicking.

***********

There was only twenty seconds left, and Amanda still hadn't gotten a hit off. It was over; there was no way she could win now, but she had to try.

"Ralts, use imprison!” she pleaded. Ralts launched the attack and to Amanda's surprise, the psychic web managed to wrap around Alan’s Pokemon! Kadabra blew back and its stat bar dropped significantly. Amanda’s hope was renewed. The stat bars were about even and Kadabra was down for the count. If she could get one more attack off in the next five seconds, victory would be hers.

But this never happened. A purplish haze began to flow through the arena. The crowd watched in wonder as the future sight attack pelted Ralts repeatedly, dropping its stat bar inches from the zero mark! Amanda winced and looked up with sadness as the timer ran out.

She had lost. Even the combo points wouldn’t save her. All that work and she had lost! A tear trickled down her face and she congratulated Alan with a shaky voice. He walked up to her and held out his hand. She took it in hers and shook it weakly.

"Good fight rookie!" he smiled trying to hide his amusement. Amanda nodded and Mike joined her.

"It was an awesome battle!" he said, trying to cheer her up. Amanda nodded.

"It was your first time. You should be happy you got this far!" Caitlin said as she approached the two.

Amanda smiled. She would have never really thought about it, but she had made it to the semifinals in her first contest ever!

"I'll win next time!" she declared with a newfound confidence.

"That's the spirit!" Caitlin replied. Alan was given a green ribbon on stage as his prize and Amanda applauded him. It was her first contest and she got far; that's all that mattered to her.

The three trainers exited the arena and onto the streets.

“Well, I must admit this was fun, but I have to get going,” Caitlin stated and shook Mike and Amanda’s hands.

“We’ll have to battle again sometime,” Mike suggested.

“Of course, 'traineree',” Caitlin replied before walking off down the road.

Mike and Amanda waved goodbye. Amanda then bent down and picked up Ralts.

"I'm proud of you!" she said while hugging it.

“And I’m proud of you. You did awesome,” Mike smiled. Amanda was overcome with joy from this statement.

Mike then noticed a large commotion up ahead. Remembering that their third companion was missing, he had no doubt that Jeff had something to do with it.

They approached to find Officer Jenny with a loud speaker telling someone in a nearby building to come out. Amanda stepped up to her.

"What's going on?" she asked.

"Some lunatic trainer barricaded himself in there after we tried to arrest him!" Jenny answered. Mike looked up into the window.

"Oh my god!" he yelled seeing Jeff poking his long face out. He instantly pulled the loud speaker from Jenny.

"Jeff, get down here right now!" he demanded. Jeff looked down smiling, and then ran down the building and came out of the door.

"Y-y-you guys can get me out of this mess," he said balling his eyes out. Amanda sighed.

"I really don't think Jeff meant to do whatever he did," she told Jenny. Jenny eyed her for a moment.

"You came in second place at the contest today right?" she asked.

"Yes!" Amanda replied with relief. Word must have traveled fast.

"Well fine, take him and go. It's the least I can do for such a great competitor. Just keep him away from floats!" she smiled.

Jeff rejoined the group and they thanked the officer. Amanda had saved the kid's butt while earlier that morning she had wanted to kill him. It was the joy she got from knowing she could do great things in upcoming contests that had made her forget her annoyance with him.

"What was that all about?" Mike asked as the three took off again down the sandstone street.

"Nothing, but I got my Poochyena!" Jeff said while changing the subject.

"Whatever," Mike replied and they headed off down the road….

Next Chapter- Chapter 14: Aron's on the Beach! Cave Escapee!
Mike and co find an Aron on a beach. Arons live in caves, why doesn't this one? Find out in the next chapter!

Sike Saner
31st August 2005, 12:24 AM
Comedic highlights:


"Oh great, I'm going to be eaten alive by a puppy! That or arrested for killing a balloon!" Jeff screamed as he sprinted along the road.


"Bonbon! I should've known!" Jeff yelled. Bonnie stood up holding her head as Clyde walked in behind her.

“My name is Bonnie you retard! Do you even listen?” she riposted.

"Of course I do Bobo,” Jeff answered.

*snort* Bonbon...

Anyway, woohoo for Jeff and his new puppy. :p That was some pretty good work on the contest, too; I particularly liked the addition of continuing commentary from the announcer through the match, plus the fact that Amanda didn't WIN WIN WIN! That would have been way too predictable.

I liked Caitlin, though. I hope she'll be making at least one more appearance in the future.

indigestible_wad
31st August 2005, 3:38 AM
This was significantly shorter than the last chapter. I think I have a firm grasp of Jeff's character now. Idiotic, but still hates being cliche. Amanda gets mad at him, while mike tries to ignore what he says and get's the two away from each other. In some ways, you could call what jeff and amanda have shippy, but you'vealready made it apparent that mike and amanda like each other.

GoldenNoctowl77
31st August 2005, 10:31 PM
Just letting you know that chapter 14 is almost done. It will be up very soon!

MORE REVIEWS FOR 13 PLEASE!!!

Sike Saner- Thanks for the great review. Yep, I wanted to give Jeff a real dark type for once. And yeah, Amanda lost as it would be stupid to make her win. As for Caitlin, she appears during other contest chapters.

I_W- The chapter wasn't that short, but remember that all chapters aren't going to be the same length. And yeah, there really is no deeper relationship for Jeff and Amanda.

legendaryrider
1st September 2005, 12:58 AM
JEFF ROCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
he loves dark types like i do he is random like i am and we'll yea. i found a life long companion. only his on the computer FWEEEEEEEEEEEEE! keep up the good work. only bad this is you also teamed up MAGMA and those water hippies.

IceKing
1st September 2005, 9:54 PM
Im not going to bother with a huge review on this one. Lol, you need to stop updating so fast! I have lots of hw and its not easy to get time to review :( I bet your doign this just so you wont hear my harsh words! Seriosuly though, I liked this chapter. The pokemon writers soooo copied you though with their May. I thought Amanda did a bit too well for her first time, and the descirption of Ralts appael didnt appeal me too much. Hehe, I used a pun! I liked how you introduced the restraunt owner and the Magma Aqua scene was indeed very suspicous. Poocheyena capture was very anime like, but I know this Poocheyena will be an enjoyable pokemon (at least, I hope)! One thign I dont understand is how an Imprison attack from Ralts brought them to a pretty even level. Are you going to use the grand festival in this fic too?And thats it, peace out!

GoldenNoctowl77
2nd September 2005, 4:06 AM
Ha, I'm trying to push the remake chapters along Iceking so that I can get to writing the new chapters again. The Grand Festival will most likely be included as closure for Amanda's quest, but it will be fresh and new from the anime's.

Anyways, here's the next remake chapter. I only spent like an hour rewriting this one because with college, work, going to the gym, and still having a social life (college started today, which takes up a lot of my time that I used for internet) I didn't have a lot of time to spend on this one. Keep that in mind when you critisize!

Chapter 14: Aron's On the Beach! Cave Escapee!

Mike and friends were now walking along a sandy beach just a few miles outside of Sandstone City. They had decided to get an early start and left as soon as the morning sun peaked above the horizon. It was a beautiful sunny day. A boardwalk path lined the beach, but the three friends decided to travel on the sand instead of the boring dock path.

"My first contest has come and gone," Amanda said in a sad voice. "Seems like just yesterday we were heading out."

Mike nodded in agreement. It also seemed like just yesterday that he and Amanda were sitting in grade school and talking about becoming Pokemon trainers. Dreams do come true, they just take time. Mike learned this many years ago, and he did so without a father figure to tell him it.

They continued along the beach for quite some time. It seemed as if this particular coast was not traveled on very often. Mike didn’t get why. The sand was so inviting that he had taken off his shoes and walked barefoot in it for the past hour, feeling the warm sensation tingle through his toes. The ocean scenery was also beautiful to behold. Mike caught a glimpse of a Wailord pod in the distance every few minutes. The gigantic creatures rose to breath and then descended underneath the water again with a splash. It was a real sight.

"For a beach, this place is pretty absent of people," Jeff noticed looking along the path. “You would think there would be some hot chicks or something that I could lather up.”

Amanda shot the lanky teen a flabbergasted look. “Jeff, not only are you a total pig, but what the hell am I?” she demanded to know.

“You are here only because I lack a conscious. God made you my Jiminy Cricket, and I don’t rub lotion all over Jiminy Cricket,” Jeff retorted. Amanda turned away from the kid. She was getting bad visuals of lathering up a Disney character and didn’t want to dwell on it much longer.

"This place is great! We should really take a break for a while. I could use some work on my tan," Mike said grinning to the others.

Amanda nodded in agreement. "We got some time to kill before we head to the harbor. I’ll make us some lunch and we can relax for a bit,” she suggested.

Jeff was instantly running down to the water. With three shots of his hands, his Pokeballs were floating in the ocean. Nuzleaf, Treecko, and Poochyena all appeared from them, flopping wildly from being called out in the water.

"Day off!" he screamed and ran off down the beach as his Pokemon tried to keep up. Amanda laughed as the tall teen toppled over and swallowed a mouthfull of sand. She then dug through her backpack and pulled out a large blanket. She laid it on the sand and sat down. Mike pulled a towel from his pack and placed it on the sand. With a sly grin, he removed his shirt and laid down on the towel.

“Tell Jeff not to bother me while I soak in these rays,” he told Amanda while positioning himself in a comfortable spot.

“Don’t you worry at all about skin cancer?” Amanda asked in a serious tone.

“Nah, just sun burn,” Mike replied with a crooked grin. Amanda shrugged and took out some condiments to make sandwiches.

"Go enjoy the beach guys!" Mike said sitting up and releasing his Pokemon. Taillow began to peck at him as Electrike chased its tail. Combusken was kicking the air.

"Taillow ow!" Mike screamed as the Pokemon battered his head. “Go play with Jeff! I’m trying to tan here!”

Electrike continued to chase its tail, and it soon smashed into Combusken. The fighting Pokemon lost its balance and fell over, causing sand to fly everywhere. Amanda laughed hysterically, dropping a bottle of mustard in the process.

"Electrike!" Mike scolded his starter. The Pokemon looked at Mike and smiled, obviously not aware that he was annoyed with it. Combusken shook sand out of its ears and stood back up.

"Well don't be shy!" Amanda said throwing her Pokeballs to join the others. Skitty, Ralts, and Mudkip appeared. "Go have fun!"

Mudkip nodded and headed to the water while Skitty chased after it. Mudkip leapt in and began to splash. Skitty hissed and backed away. Mudkip motioned for it to join in, but Skitty didn't seem to like water.

Meanwhile, Jeff pulled a Frisbee from his backpack. With a giant toss, Poochyena was chasing it. It leapt up and grabbed the disc, landing in the muddy sand near the water afterwards.

"Ha-ha, nice catch pup!" Jeff laughed. Poochyena growled and brought the Frisbee back. Jeff bent down to grab it and the Pokemon shook, getting mud all over its trainer. Poochyena cackled with laughter as Jeff rubbed the disgusting dirt out of his eye. He then grabbed the wolf Pokemon by its neck and hoisted it up.

"You think that's funny?" he roared. Poochyena gave him a puppy dog look, but it didn't work.

"Hey Nuzleaf, go fetch!" Jeff said chucking Poochyena across the beach. He laughed to himself as Nuzleaf dove to catch the soaring Pokemon.

"That'll teach ya!" he yelled at it. Nuzleaf caught the pup and landed hard in the sand. To Jeff’s surprise, Poochyena came running back and signaled for him to do it again.

"You nitwit! That was not supposed to be fun!" he stated. Poochyena happily growled and nudged his leg.

Electrike was now curiously sniffing around Mike as the teen tried to soak in the rays. It began to bark hysterically, wanting its trainer to play with it. Taillow also continued to fly down and peck him. Mike was beginning to realize that his quest for skin color was not going to work when his Pokemon were around. He stood up and sighed.

The teen began to walk down the beach, placing his shirt back on as he did. Electrike yapped as it followed its trainer. Taillow landed on his shoulder and pecked away at his temple, causing a red mark to swell up. Mike pulled a granola bar from his pocket and unwrapped it. The bird glared at it until the teen tossed fragments to the ground. It stopped its pecking parade and flew down to mop up the granola goodness.

As he and Electrike walked on, Mike picked up a piece of drift wood and chucked it. Electrike happily ran over and retrieved it. Its trainer caught up and kneeled down to stroke the Pokemon under its chin.

"We have a long road ahead of us buddy! It’s not all fun and games," he said. Electrike leapt into his arms. Mike stood up and saw something shiny and metal ahead. It was half buried in the sand but seemed to be moving. He decided to check it out. Upon further inspection he concluded that the metal really was moving as if trying to bury into the sand without luck. It then pooped its head up and exposed two big blue eyes. The creature’s face was made of complete steel. It had two large nostril holes and a large bulky head. Its body was a shell of metal and it had no visible tail. Mike took out his Pokedex to get some information about it.

"Aron; the iron armor Pokemon. This Pokemon has a body of steel. To make its body, Aron feeds on iron that it digs from mountains. Occasionally, it causes major trouble by eating bridges and rails," the Pokedex said.

"Wow, an Aron!" Mike was overjoyed. As he tried to move closer, he was suddenly face to face with a strange bearded man. This man’s black eyes were wide as if piercing Mike’s soul. He opened his mouth to speak, but only managed to cough on Mike first, his yellow teeth exposed in the process.

"Yes, this is an Aron!" the man stated after his coughing fest. Mike was a little confused.

"The name is Professor Herbert Haliban. I am here studying this Aron! You see, most Arons live in dark caves so that they can feed on iron, but this one doesn't. People in town have reported it, saying it appeared two months ago," he explained. The man talked so fast that it took some time to get the information through Mike’s head.

"Wait, why is it here on the beach then?" Mike finally replied.

"That's what I intend to find out!' the professor muttered and looked around as if to make sure no one was looking.

"And I have to do it soon. This is not a safe area," he remarked.

"What do you mean?" Mike asked.

***********

Jeff sighed and tossed his Poochyena into the air again. This was supposed to be a puppy punishment, but it seemed to have backfired. This time Treecko leapt to catch it. Jeff had fun the first few throws but his attention deficit disorder was starting to take hold.

Nuzleaf went deep and Jeff flung Poochyena as far as he could. The pup sailed too far over and Nuzleaf dove to catch it, smashing its head into a half buried wooden sign in the sand.

“Are you ok?” Jeff inquired walking over to it. He then noticed the sign.

"Warning- dangerous tides. Water reaches shore level once a week! No swimming!" it read. Jeff read it over a few times, thinking intently about what it meant.

“What the hell is a tide? I thought that was some sort of bleach,” he said and walked away. He sat down on Amanda’s blanket and snatched a sandwich she had made.

“So how was your little game?” she asked him while petting Skitty.

“It got boring. Plus I found this sign about dangerous tide bleach,” Jeff replied.

“Wait, what?” Amanda asked him. Jeff pointed to the sign in the sand and his female friend approached it. She read it over and immediately looked around the beach. It all made sense now! The sand had a distinct impression that it got covered by water recently. No one left the safety of the boardwalk path because of it!

“Jeff, you are such a nitwit! It’s not talking about bleach. It’s talking about the ocean tide!” Amanda exclaimed while spinning around.

“Oooooooh…I don’t get it,” Jeff followed up with a confused expression. Amanda couldn’t help but glare at the teen.

“When the tide comes in, this whole beach will be covered by a lot of water. Water deep enough for a dull-brained boy to drown in,” Amanda explained. Jeff’s eyes opened wide and he backed off.

“Then let’s get the hell out of here!” he shouted.

“Mike doesn’t know about this. We have to find him first,” Amanda stated.

*********

Bonnie and Clyde had now stepped off of the boardwalk and onto the same beach that their prey had gone before.

"What a great place this is!" Bonnie exclaimed with a twirl.

"Sure," Clyde replied monotonously. "If you like water!"

Bonnie shot him a look of utter resentment, as if Clyde just overstepped his boundaries.

"Those morns came through here. I just know it," she declared as they trudged along.

"Bonnie, I don't get something! If we are supposed to be leading them to the shrine, then why are we tailing them and not having them follow us?" Clyde wondered. This question was so random, and Bonnie was annoyed to the extreme by it.

"Because, my naïve little friend, they won't follow us if we don't have something of there's. So we follow them, steal their Pokemon, and make for the shrine! It’s the perfect plan,” she answered. Clyde was about to speak when he suddenly realized that he was up to his ankles in water!

“****, it must be high tide time!” Bonnie cursed.

*********

Professor Haliban was taking notes in a large journal as he studied the Aron's behavior. Mike yawned as he sat. He was bored watching the Pokemon dig below the sand and then spring right back up. He was waiting for the professor to leave so he could have a shot at catching the Aron.

"I have concluded why the Aron is here!" the professor finally responded and stood up from his learning trance.

"And?" Mike pushed him on.

"It's obvious that there are no iron deposits here, so Aron must've gotten lost and stumbled upon this beach!" he concluded with his finger up in the air. Mike rolled back with a sigh.

"All that studying for that?" he yelled.

Amanda and Jeff finally found their friend and came running up to him.

"We have to get out of here!" Amanda yelled, her arms flailing like a mad-woman.

"I wanted to do that twenty minutes ago, but now it’s too late!" Jeff commented. Amanda looked down to see that the ocean was now spilling onto the beach, gaining height at a rapid rate. She recalled her Pokemon, which had followed her down the beach, and everyone else did the same.

"Great, we escaped a forest of ghosts only to drown in bleach! Some fun we're having!" Jeff yelled as he jogged in place.

“Jeff, for the last time, this is an ocean tide!” Amanda shouted.

“Then why is it all foamy?” Jeff inquired.

“Because it’s the sea! The sea is foamy!” Amanda screeched.

"I got ya’ll covered!" the professor suddenly interrupted and stepped toward them. He pulled out a small rubber package and pulled the string the was hanging from it. The box exploded spilling cardboard into the rising tide. A yellow substance was in the man’s hand and it quickly inflated into a survival raft. The professor smiled and dropped the rubbery life boat into the water as it grew to full size.

"Everyone in, the water level will be rising quickly!" he said. Everyone listened without hesitation.

Mike sat in the raft and turned to see that the Aron was running along the beach, trying to find a safe spot from the water.

"Aron's not in the raft!" he said pointing to the Pokemon.

"It’s a steel type! If we don't get it in here it will drown for sure!" the professor stated. He then reached into his backpack and pulled out a small boat motor.

"Always come prepared!" he laughed as he hooked it up. The water level was now high enough that the boat was floating. With a cry from the motor, the group began their pursuit of the iron Pokemon. As they sped along, Professor Haliban pulled out a small net and extended the handle.

“What the hell are you, Professor Prepared-for-everything?” Jeff yelped.

"I always travel with these items when I am near the ocean. The raft and motor are for when I want to get a better view of aquatic Pokemon, and the net is for catching them. We may have to snag the little bugger!" Professor Haliban replied.

***********

Meanwhile, Team Steam had found a large piece of driftwood to float on. It appeared to be a charred log that had once been quite alive. It now, however, gave the two a nice gift of black spots wherever they touched it.

"Wow, water!" Clyde sighed sarcastically. Bonnie snorted and tossed a Pokeball into the high tide, releasing Wooper, her small, blue, amphibian friend.

"Propel us forward you!" she demanded. Wooper smiled and shot a water gun behind them, pushing the log through the water.

"Hey, there they are!" Clyde said pointing ahead. The group that they were searching for was in a large raft and was chasing some shiny metal Pokemon. The creature was now running on the sand closest to where the beach met the boardwalk. The wall was too high to climb though and there wasn’t a staircase in sight. The raft floated alongside the Pokemon as a man pushed a net towards it.

"They'll never get that Pokemon in time! They have to stay in the deep part of the water while it runs closest to the boardwalk!" Bonnie smiled. "Now Wooper, full speed into the raft!"

Mike grew tired of the Professor’s slow progress and snatched the net from him, extending it speedily towards Aron. It was now stuck on a small sand bar that was quickly disappearing. The tide had set in everywhere else on the beach and the tide wall kept the Pokemon from getting to safety.

"I can't reach it!" Mike yelled.

"Quick, someone hold onto him!" the professor requested. Amanda grabbed Mike's legs and he paddled himself forward. His legs remained inside the raft but the rest of his body was lying just on top of the water. The net was moving up and down in the teen’s hands.

"Here little Aron!" Mike whispered.

"It’s not going to come,! Just let it drown!" Jeff yelled, his tone far from concerned. Mike rolled his eyes.

Suddenly, something smashed into the side of the raft and Mike found himself toppling over the side and under the water.

"We're deflating!" Amanda screamed and pointed to a large hole that was now in the raft. Air spilled out at an increasing rate.

"We're all going to die! Every man for themselves!" Jeff shouted and tried to find a way out of the dilemma. The professor leapt towards the hole and tried to plug it.

Bonnie and Clyde laughed from the log-turned-torpedo that they sat on.

"Going down?" they said in unison.

Mike surfaced to see Aron's dry ground was almost gone. It would be completely submerged in a matter of seconds.

"I won't let you drown, just come to me!" Mike said holding out his hand from the ocean, treading water as he did. He could tell the current was starting to strengthen, and he too needed to get out of the water before he was swept out to sea. Aron backed away shaking its metallic head.

"You leave me no choice then!" Mike yelled and pulled a Pokeball from his belt.

"Go!" he yelled tossing it towards the steel type. The ball hit Aron on the head and it was sucked inside in a flash of crimson light. Mike swam over to the shaking Pokeball and clasped it tightly in his hand before it could even signal a catch. The sand bar disappeared under the tide seconds later. Mike then swam back towards the raft, but saw that it wasn’t any safer than where he was now.

"Wooper, water gun!" Bonnie ordered as her water type jumped from the ocean and onto the deflating boat.

"Mudkip, use your water gun!" Amanda commanded. The attacks collided, canceling each other out it a blast of cold spouts. Bonnie and Clyde were safely aboard the driftwood while the raft was going down fast. Professor Haliban was trying to patch the hole with some duct tape, but it wasn’t working well.

Mike leapt onto the remaining floating section of the raft. The current was now picking up speed. Up above, Mike noticed Taillow. In all the chaos, he had forgotten to recall it!

"Hey!" he shouted through cupped hands to his swallow Pokemon. Taillow flew down and pecked his head, seemingly unaware that its trainer was in mortal danger.

"Ow, Taillow, get the steams, not me!" he yelled, trying to smack the pest away. Taillow turned and smashed into the driftwood with its shoulder. Bonnie and Clyde teetered a bit, and then fell in as the log toppled over.

"You stupid bird!" Bonnie yelled through mouthfuls of water and trying to grab back onto the driftwood. Taillow laughed and pecked at her head as she did.

"Look Bonnie, I don't even have to swim!" Clyde smiled as he floated by her at a very fast speed. Bonnie then realized she was floating away too!

"You idiot, we're in the current!" she yelled. The two screamed and tried to swim against the current as they floated away. Wooper leapt into the water and swam after them.

The raft was almost under and soon the group would share the same fate as their attackers.

"Where's Aron?" the professor asked as he busily worked to plug the hole.

"I took care of it!" Mike replied. “Aron is safely inside a Pokeball that I own.”

"Wow, too bad you can't enjoy you're accomplishment! Did you notice the twenty feet of water spilling into our boat? And did you also notice the raging current of death that it seemed to bring with it?" Jeff asked sarcastically.

Suddenly, the Pokeball in Mike’s hand opened and Aron appeared on the remaining dry portion of the raft.

"Dude, get back in your Pokeball, you'll sink!" Mike yelled. Aron shook its head and leapt into the water. It sunk fast as bubbles rose to the surface.

“Wow, that Pokemon would rather drown itself than be with you Mike,” Jeff couldn’t help but say with a grin.

Mike was in shock at what just happened. He watched the rising bubbles and prepared to leap after the suicidal Pokemon. Suddenly, the Aron rose to the surface again and was treading water! The iron Pokemon was actually swimming. The Pokemon paddled to the piece of driftwood and bit onto a small twig that branched off of it. Aron then swam back toward the raft. Mike and co understood that it was getting them the log so that they could get on it and away from the sinking boat. They all leapt on without hesitation.

“All this and that walking paperweight could swim? How is that even possible?” Mike wondered with a shocked look.

“Well, Aron has buoyancy. Its metallic body is actually lighter than the water pressure and so it is propelled upward just as the log we are sitting on is.”

Mike and Amanda looked at the professor, but then turned immediately to the actual source of this information-Jeff! The lanky teen smiled before squinting hard and looking around as if he blacked out.

“Did you say something?” he asked the professor.

“Not a thing,” Haliban replied with as much confusion as the others.

After making it onto the boardwalk, Mike and his friends took a long breather.

"I think there was a different reason Aron was here!" the professor said over his many breathes. "Hmm, an Aron that can swim, and in strong currents to boot! Very interesting!"

"And it's mine!" Mike grinned. Aron waddled up to Mike and nudged him. "If that's ok with you of course! I kind of caught you without thinking!"

Aron nodded and leapt into the panting boy’s arms.

“You've got a nice Pokemon there Mike! Treat it well!" Professor Haliban remarked. Mike nodded to the old man.

"Wow, always at the brink of death do we get saved by the most ironic things!" Jeff muttered. Mike couldn’t help but smile at his friend’s play on words. Then, with a goodbye to the professor, the group head off once again.

Next Chapter- Chapter 15: Alabor City! Panic in the Harbor!
Mike and co reach Alabor City, which contains the ferry to the next gym town, but something goes terribly wrong!

indigestible_wad
2nd September 2005, 4:12 AM
I don't think that a rock/steel type can float on the water, considering that both of them sink if you put them in water. But I guess that logic doesn't really matter anymore.

I knew there was something with the beach. When aron popped out, I thought it was it. But apparently it was tides. THe only thing is, water doesn't rise that fast, and even if it did, the slope of the beach would be shallow, meaning htat it wouldn't be very dangerous if it did. Meh, I'm using too much logic, this is a story about imaginary creatures, I shouldn't worry about what's real and whaat's not. Good chapter.

GoldenNoctowl77
2nd September 2005, 8:10 PM
I don't think that a rock/steel type can float on the water, considering that both of them sink if you put them in water. But I guess that logic doesn't really matter anymore.

I knew there was something with the beach. When aron popped out, I thought it was it. But apparently it was tides. THe only thing is, water doesn't rise that fast, and even if it did, the slope of the beach would be shallow, meaning htat it wouldn't be very dangerous if it did. Meh, I'm using too much logic, this is a story about imaginary creatures, I shouldn't worry about what's real and whaat's not. Good chapter.

Ha, point taken. I knew when writing this chapter that a lot of it was very unplausible. However, I wanted to make Mike's Aron unqiue without using the generic "shiny" change. This chapter was originally written two years ago, and back then I thought "what could I do to make Mike's Aron really unqiue?" And I knew that both rock and steel sunk, so I thought it would be cool to do something so unexpected. A steel/rock type that had enough strength to keep itself afloat. No one would expect it.

As for the tide thing, I know tides usually aren't that dangerous, but I'm not an expert on them since I live inland and nowhere near an ocean. However, who's to say that there can't be a spot where the tide comes in fast and rises many feet above the beach? That's why I added the "tide wall" to the chapter. It is basically a damn between the boardwalk and the beach with a few stairs to allow access to the beach, but it acts as a block for the water. They probably don't exist, but this is a make believe world as you said. LOL

GoldenNoctowl77
3rd September 2005, 1:32 AM
Meh, I wanted to wait until chapter 14 had more reviews, but I decided that since chapter 15 was done, I might as well post it. My faithful reviewers will just have to read and review two chapters. I think this one came out well. It involves the returning of a character introduced in the beginning. It seems as if he has improved from what his character was like in the start, but as readers remember, it goes downhill very quickly. I hope you enjoy the 15th remake chapter, and be sure to read and review the 14th if you haven't yet!

Chapter 15: Alabor City! Panic in the Harbor!


"Electrike, use quick attack!" Mike yelled as his faithful Pokemon stormed toward the Zigzagoon on the other side of a grassy field.

"Zigzagoon, don't give in! Dodge and use head butt!" a command came from behind the raccoon Pokemon. Two trainers were on cement sidewalks on both sides of the field. Mike had met an eighteen year old boy named Anson on his way towards his next badge and decided right away to have a battle. Anson had blonde hair that curled behind his ears. His bangs drooped down to his blue eyes, and his tan face was long with a small amount of chin hair poking out of the tip. He was a typical skater boy, wearing a popular punk band shirt and khaki shorts. He had a skateboard tucked tightly under his left arm and ordered his small beige and brown rodent Pokemon around with his free hand. In other words, Mike saw him as a complete pushover.

The current battle was taking place in a public park next to the ocean. Zigzagoon did as ordered, leaping above Electrike and bringing its furry head down on the electric type’s back. It was a crushing blow that caused the pup to yelp in pain. It slumped down and struggled to regain its footing.

"Electrike, get up!" Mike yelled. His Pokemon wobbled on its paws with one eye squinted and bruised. “Now, use a spark attack.”

“Zigzagoon, stop it with a growl,” Anson thought up quick, dropping his skateboard with the enthusiasm he put into his command. It hit the cement wheels up and made a loud crash. Electrike stood in place and began to charge up the electrical attack by running static along its fur, but Zigzagoon had too much energy. It speedily began to snarl at Electrike, causing the canine Pokemon to lose concentration. Without being able to focus on the electricity producing glands in its body, Electrike’s fur stopped sparking.

“Now Zigzagoon, use quick attack,” Anson demanded. The spiky-furred Pokemon nodded and began to rush at Electrike in a zigzag pattern.

“Electrike, thunder wave!” Mike wanted to try a new strategy. Without the growling noise to distract the Pokemon, Electrike managed to charge up the web of electricity and shield itself as Zigzagoon came in close. The raccoon Pokemon yelped as it was engulfed in a net of electricity. Its body began to numb and it couldn’t move a muscle.

“Electrike, let’s finish this off with a quick attack of our own,” Mike declared. He was now grinning from ear to ear. He was on the verge of a loss and managed to turn the battle around.

“Odor sleuth,” the voice of Anson rang out over the field. Though Zigzagoon could not bring itself to move its feet, it still had a sense of smell. The rodent Pokemon began to sniff at the air, taking in every scent that it could. Electrike ran at its opponent, using what spare electricity it could to power its tiny legs.

“Now that you’ve got its scent, I think we can use a pin missile,” Anson stated. Still unmoving, Zigzagoon cried out as barbs of its own fur began to torpedo from its skin in every direction. Electrike was hit dead on in the face, the pup Pokemon yelping in pain as its opponent’s fur was embedded into its own. Electrike stumbled for a few moments before collapsing inches away from striking its opponent.

“Get up Electrike!” Mike shouted, but his Pokemon didn’t budge. "Return!"

In a flash of crimson light, Mike’s starter Pokemon was sucked back inside its spherical home.

"Now I know that you're not all powerful. I knew you’d lose eventually. We can’t win them all, and I’m proud of how hard you tried,” Mike said to the Pokemon inside the Pokeball. "Great battle Anson!"

"You too dude!" Anson called back. He then bent down and picked up his fallen skateboard. After he made sure it was okay, he recalled his Zigzagoon for some rest.

"Wow, an actual loss for Mike!" Jeff snickered. “And I thought God loved you.”

"Yeah, but you have to take into account what happened this week. We haven't seen a single Pokemon Center and Electrike has been in many battles," Amanda cut in. The two friends joined their third companion.

"Tell ya’ what guys, I'll take you to the Pokecenter in Alabor City," Anson offered. “I have to go there to heal Zigzagoon after that match anyways dudes.”

“That would be great,” Mike replied. The three then began to follow Anson down the sidewalk path through the calming park.

"Look at the size of this place!" Jeff said in awe as they made their way into the city. They were walking along a sidewalk that was bordered by many office buildings. Sky scrapers loomed in the distance and it seemed like every turn held a set of stairs.

"Yep, Alabor is one of the biggest cities in the whole archipelago. I find it totally rad because of all the boardwalks and stairs. It's the perfect place to skate!" Anson explained. Several sets of stairs later and the group had made it to the Alabor Pokemon Center. This particular center seemed double the size of every one that Mike had currently been in. It had an extra zone with small hotel rooms for trainers. The backyard was surrounded by a massive fence that housed a battlefield.

The four teens walked up to the sliding glass doors and then proceeded inside. There, a Nurse Joy was busily bandaging up a Sandshrew on a medical cart. Her hair curls seemed slightly longer than the average Joy and her skin was far from pale.

"Hey Shelia!" Anson said to her.

"How many times do I have to tell you Anson, it's Joy!" the Nurse replied, a fake grin spread across her uneasily happy face.

"Hey, I can use Australian slang if I want to!" Anson said with a laugh. "Anyways, my friend here has some Pokemon that need some healing. We had a tough match. Of course, I came out on top Shelia,"

Joy gave the round pink Chansey next to her the anesthetic she was applying to Sandshrew and approached the teens.

"Well then, can I have his Pokeballs?" she said holding out her hand. At this comment, Jeff broke into hysterical laughter. He placed a hand to his mouth and turned around as if he was trying to hide this outburst from Joy. Amada rolled her eyes and grabbed the teen on the shoulder.

“Shut up! You are so immature!” she exclaimed tugging on his shirt.

Mike pulled his four Pokeballs from his belt and handed them to the nurse.

"It will take about a half hour to check up on all of them. Why don't you get something to eat while you wait?" she suggested.

"Sounds good to me! Let's go to that Burger King we passed on the way here. You know, have it your way like the slogan!" Jeff recommended. Mike ignored him and turned to Amanda. He knew she would offer a better place to dine.

"That’s too greasy Jeff. Let's just go to the center diner!" she decided.

“I agree. We want to keep in shape on our journey,” Mike stated. He said this partly because it was what he believed, but mostly because he wanted to agree with Amanda.

“But we walk everywhere we go! We must have gone hundreds of miles since we started. I don’t think a little bit of greasy food would hurt,” Jeff pleaded.

“Sorry mate, looks like you’re outnumbered. I don’t think you’ll have it your way today,” Anson laughed, obviously mocking the teen. Jeff eyed Amanda and she stuck out her tongue.

The four of them entered the diner to find a bunch of other trainers sitting down at the booths and tables that were spread about. Mike didn’t pay much attention to them and instead walked straight to the lunch line. It was then that he noticed a familiar whipped hair style in front of him.

“Matt?” Mike chirped up, hoping he was right. The person in front spun around and smiled. His white teeth showed through thick lips and round cheeks. The teen’s jet black hair was short, but his sideburns were unshaven and long. He too sported the chin hair look. His body was built and muscular. It was Mike’s older brother Matt alright. A bipedal blue Pokemon was standing next to him. It had a bulging mouth with pointy teeth. It looked like a mix between a dinosaur, a crocodile, and some type of evil bulldog. Its stomach was cream colored and this pattern rolled over the Pokemon’s shoulder like a toga. Its tail was short and stubby with a red scale poking out. This was a Croconaw.

"Oh, if it isn't my tiny bro!" Matt said with a smirk.

"It’s good to see you're still alive. Where's Kevin?" Mike said unenthusiastically.

"There!" he pointed to the gimpy kid by the refreshment stand. Kevin’s dirty blonde hair was completely shaven off. He was now sporting the buzz cut look and his eyes looked blood red. His nose was slightly crooked and his body was unappealingly thin. The kid was standing next to a young blonde girl, trying to flirt up a storm. She grew tired of him and walked away laughing.

"Hey Kev, get you're butt over here!" Matt roared. Kevin waddled over with a stalker-like grin.

"She wants me!" he cackled while scrunching his neck inward.

"Sure bud…" Matt replied. "Look who it is!"

He pointed to his younger brother.

"Ahh, its dipstick! How are you kid?" Kevin said.

"Um, good…" Mike replied. He hated Kevin but had to put up with him for many years. It had to be something with being called a dipstick. If anyone was one, it had to be Kevin. The kid was a complete moron.

"I see you're actually training. You're Totodile evolved," Mike turned to his brother.

"Yeah, it's a lot better tennis player now that it can reach the top of the net!" he laughed while putting a hand of his Pokemon’s head. Croconaw gave out a low roar.

"Shut up and eat your fries!" Matt scolded it.

"Any badges?" Mike asked.

"Ha, why would I be earning badges? Hell no, me and Croconaw are training for the Pokemon Partner Tennis tournament!" Matt riposted.

"Uh, it's Croconaw and I. Anyways, is there such a thing?" Mike corrected his brother’s grammar and then asked.

"Yep, or I wouldn't be training for it butt hole!" Matt retorted sarcastically. Amanda called over to Mike from a booth in the corner. He turned to see they had ordered their food and found a table.

"Well, I have to go!" Mike told his brother.

"Wait a tic! You're not leaving this city without battling your big bro!" Matt smiled.

"Fine, after lunch!" Mike replied.

Mike sat down next to Amanda and she handed him a grilled chicken sandwich.

"You always know exactly what I want!" he said happily. It was true. The two had ordered for each other when one wasn’t available since they were nine. Amanda loved Caesar salads and Mike liked anything with grilled chicken.

Mike then noticed that Jeff's tray contained an assortment of everything. It looked like a royal buffet from medieval times.

"Are you going to eat all that?" Mike asked with a confused expression. Jeff looked down at his plate. It was covered with two greasy cheeseburgers, a parfait, an ice cream sundae topped with chocolate sauce, even greasier fries, a fattening soda, a bag of chocolate chip cookies, and a thing of rice, which was also covered in chocolate.

"Of course bud!" Jeff laughed and scrounged a bite from his burger.

"Eww, it makes me sick just watching you!" Amanda said disgusted.

"Ha, doesn't bother me dudes!" Anson replied.

"Congrats Anson. You've joined me and Amanda in the club for those who can tolerate Jeff. Current Members- just us three!" Mike joked.

"Ha-ha!" Jeff did a fake laugh before taking a spoonful of his chocolate covered rice.

**********

Meanwhile, Team Steam was at the Alabor City Bridge, a small, wooden suspension bridge that was the only entrance to the peninsula city. Slugma was busily burning away at the hinges of the bridge with a flamethrower from a hidden position behind a lamp pole.

"Keep on burning them!" Clyde said happily.

"What a great plan! We destroy the bridge and take control of the whole city! No one can save them without a way in!" Bonnie laughed. Slugma burned through the first two support beams and started on the next two.

"Bonnie, what about the harbor? Boats can come to the rescue!" Clyde informed her.

"Shut up!" Bonnie said angrily. "We only need a small span of time to steal the center's Pokemon! By the time they figure that out, we’ll be long gone."

Slugma finally burned through the remaining hinges. The bridge began to sway and the team members hid in the bushes.

"TIMBER!!!" Clyde roared as the wooden bridge toppled down into the lake below with a massive splash. Cars began to round the bend, stopping suddenly and wondering what had just occurred.

"Now begins our twenty minutes of glory!' Bonnie grinned.

*********

Mike had finished his lunch and met his older brother in the backyard of the Pokemon Center. Matt was already standing on one side of the battlefield talking with some giggling girls. He noticed his brother enter and smiled.

“Well then! I guess you made the perfect time to show up. I can show these chicks how talented I am,” Matt gawked. The girls giggled some more and sat down on a bench behind the teen boy. Mike ignored the comment and took his side on the opposite section of the battlefield.

The brothers were now facing each other, Mike having a Pokeball in his hand. Anson sat in the stands to the side of the field with some other skater boys. Apparently, he had told a few people that it was the "Brother's duel" and would be fun to watch. Amanda and Jeff joined the teen and looked down at their friend.

"One on one bro!" Matt called out through cupped hands. "Of course I choose Croconaw!"

The brother watched his reptilian Pokemon waddle into the battlefield before turning to the girls behind him and winking. Kevin was breathing heavily next to them, his eyes fixed on their chests. The girls finally noticed this and stood up to join the other people in the stands.

"Hmm, I'll test out Aron!" Mike said throwing the Pokeball. Aron formed on the ground and opened its big blue eyes. "Ready buddy?"

Aron nodded and took a tiny leap into the air.

"Ha! This will be a piece of cake. Everyone knows that Arons are weak against water! I’ll have to tell mom that you didn’t learn a thing in class," Matt laughed.

"I know perfectly well what I’m doing. What would you say if I told you that this hunk of metal could swim?” Mike inquired with a look of pride on his face.

“I’d say you’re bluffing,” Matt responded.

“Just get on with the match already!” Jeff yelled from the stands while shoving a chocolate chip cookie into his already full mouth.

"Aron, use tackle!" Mike commanded. Aron charged at Croconaw, but the blue skinned Pokemon was instantly out of the way.

"Water gun!" Matt yelled. Croconaw opened its mouth as gurgling water spurted out. Aron took the hit, but didn't seem too affected by it. The Pokemon’s metallic body glistened from the wash that it received.

"Aron, use take down!" Mike roared. Aron charged full blast at Croconaw and smashed into it, causing the surprised reptile to topple backward. Aron didn’t even recoil from the massive hit that it just made.

“Woah dudes! That Aron has the rock head ability,” Anson stated with an impressed tone.

Croconaw stood up and glared at its opponent. The Pokemon’s bulbous mouth hung open and its red tongue flicked around.

"Use dynamic punch!" Matt tried a new tactic. Croconaw nodded and ran at Aron, its hand in a massive glowing fist.

"Dodge!" Mike yelled, but Aron was unable too move fast enough. Croconaw blasted it with its fist and sent it flying into the air. Aron landed hard onto the field, causing a deep notch to form in the ground. Croconaw dealt a nice blow, but it was now shaking its hand from the punch to a steel being.

"Take down again!" Mike repeated. Aron charged Croconaw and slammed into it, but just fell back dazed.

"What are you doing Aron? That was the wall!" Mike roared as his Pokemon charged the wall again.

"It's confused bro! That's what dynamic punch does," Matt smirked.

Aron blinked its spinning blue eyes, trying to focus on the opponent. It seemed really weak.

Suddenly, Bonnie and Clyde leapt over the fence of the center and landed on the side of the field.

"Nice fight moron," Clyde laughed before continuing, "but this is where it ends!"

"What do you guys want?" Mike asked already knowing the answer.

"Oh, the usual! We've come to pillage and plunder the city. You know…take the Pokemon!" Bonnie grinned.

"Sorry Matt, but this battle is over!" Mike said. He then recalled the confused Aron to its Pokeball.

"How are you two planning on taking all of the Pokemon? There are way too many trainers here to face!" Mike asked while placing a hand up to show off Anson and his friends.

"Well, we thought about that. And that's why we brought along these," Clyde held up a black ball. It had a person coughing painted on the side. This was a smoke bomb.

"What the heck," Mike gasped, but the bomb was then thrown. It erupted in a burst of smoke in front of him. Before Mike knew what happened, Wooper appeared through the fog and snatched the Pokeballs from his belt. The whole backyard was now covered with smoke, and Mike could hear the trainers yelling through it for their missing Pokeballs.

"Amanda, where are you guys?" Mike asked with a cough. He couldn't see a thing and his Pokemon were gone!

Bonnie held out a sack as Wooper brought Pokeball after Pokeball to her. Clyde gave off an evil smirk and folded his arms.

"I think we have enough!" Bonnie grinned. Clyde nodded and the two rushed off, leaping over the fence and disappearing. After several minutes, the smoke began to clear from the field. Mike found Amanda by the bottom of the stands and walked over to her.

"My Pokemon are gone!" Amanda cried.

"Everyone's are you dummy!" the two heard Jeff riposte. They turned to see that in the blinding of the smoke, the teen had managed to get himself tangled in between the seats of the stands.

"Croconaw, where are you?" Matt said looking around.

"We have to get them back!" Mike declared. Anson nodded in agreement.

"Let's go!" he ordered and the group ran to the exit of the center.

***********

Bonnie and Clyde were now at the Alabor harbor just down the road from the center. All they had done was run down the street and down a set of stairs which led to a dock. Clyde looked down the road to the bridge to see Officer Jenny on the other side trying to direct the traffic away from the area.

"Ha, out plan worked! They can't get across!" he laughed.

"Told ya!" Bonnie replied. She spied a ferry anchored in the water just down the dock. It led to Vineal City, the closest place to the second gym. It was obvious that Mike and his friends were going to board it when they left here.

"We can't stall away on that one as the morons will be on it!" Bonnie stated. She then spied a small sailboat parked just below the dock that they were currently on.

"There!" she pointed. The two walked to the edge of the dock and down the stairs to the small boat. Bonnie placed the sack of Pokeballs inside and the two leapt in.

“Now we don’t have to stall away. We can just get away!” she grinned.

*********

Mike and co rushed through the busy city streets asking everyone they met if they saw two strange people go by with a sack. They got a few leads, and ended up at the harbor just in time to see Team Steam shove off from the dock.

"They're getting away!" Mike yelled.

"Not today!" Jeff roared and leapt off the boardwalk and onto the beach that bordered the harbor. Little did he know that the boardwalk was quite a ways above the sand. He landed with a thud on the ground as sand flew everywhere.

"Ugh…" he said weakly as the other three ran to the railing and peered over.

"Nice try!" Mike said sarcastically as his friend spit up sand below.

"Goodbye morons!" Bonnie said and blew a kiss from the sailboat. The wind was starting to pick up and they were moving fast away from the docks.

"Get back here!" Mike ordered.

"Ok,” Bonnie said turning the sail and heading back as Clyde tumbled backward from the sudden change of direction. She then spun the sail again and headed away, grinning as she did. “Not!” she yelled back.

"Stay here, I have an idea!" Mike said to the others.

“I need to borrow that,” Mike told Anson while pointing to the teen’s skateboard.

“Ok dude, but take care of it,” Anson replied while handing Mike his prized possession.

Team Steam was sailing along a small section of the dock that ended at a point. A railing led all the way down it and ended right where the dock did. Mike knew he didn’t have a lot of time. He rushed to where the railing descended and chucked the board onto it. Before the skateboard could slide off, he leapt onto it, grinding down the railing and picking up speed. The slope of the railing stopped and Mike slid along it until it came to the end. The skateboard flew off and into the water and Mike followed soon after.

“That kid’s got moves, but he just lost my board! Not cool,” Anson shrieked.

Mike surfaced next to the sailboat and grabbed hold of the side.

"Get away!" Bonnie yelled while shooing him off. "Wooper, stop him!"

Wooper leapt in the water with a tiny splash. Mike tried to pull himself in but something grabbed hold of his leg and tugged downward. He couldn’t hold on any more and let go, allowing himself to sink below the surface.

Wooper grinned as it pulled the teen into the murky depths of the sea, trying hard to drown him. Mike tried to kick the creature off, but it wouldn't let go, and it was definitely a stronger swimmer than him. This was it! Mike was going to drown by a Wooper pulling him underwater.

He couldn't breathe and needed air, but the smiling Pokemon kept pulling him down. Suddenly, Wooper hit what looked like the bottom. But is wasn't, unless of course the bottom of the ocean was as blue as the sky above.

This was the back of a very large Pokemon. Mike had seen them while traveling the beach that he found Aron on. It was a Wailord! The gigantic blue whales were migrating along the ocean and must have been passing by. The leathery skin of the creature was very sensitive as the whale gave a humongous bellow when the small Wooper smacked into it.

The Wailord began to rise very fast. Mike squinted through the water as he rose to see that this particular Wailord was slightly ahead of the rest of the pod. The ones that tagged along let out angelic tunes as they swam.

Bonnie and Clyde watched the water under their boat begin to ripple. It soon turned into a festival of waves as the creature rose to the surface.

"What the hell?" Bonnie said looking at Clyde. Suddenly, their boat was not in the water anymore. They were on the back of the surfaced Wailord! The Pokemon blew water from its spout and let out a large grunt. Now on the surface, Mike shook his foot very hard and Wooper bounced away.

"No, this can't be possible!" Bonnie said in shock. Mike took this time to lunge for the sailboat. The massive Pokemon was now starting to dive again. He leapt into the boat and grabbed the Pokeball sack as Bonnie and Clyde sat frozen with open mouths.

Mike dug through the sack and found the familiar greenish Poketech balls. He threw one hoping to get his Pokemon, but it opened up to reveal Amanda’s Ralts.

"Oops, you’re Amanda's Pokemon!" he said with a grin. After several more tries, Mike finally found the Pokemon he was searching for; his miraculous swimming Aron. He prepared to dive into the water and allow Aron to take him back to shore, but he then noticed that Croconaw was tied up inside the boat.

Wailord was now reaching the point where its back would disappear under the water.

"Aron use take down!" Mike commanded. Bonnie finally realized what had happened and looked at him as Aron smashed into their boat.

"Slugma, go!' Clyde said throwing the ball. Water erupted all around as Wailord continued to dive.

"Tackle!" Mike yelled. Aron tackled Slugma as soon as the red light went away and sent if flying. Suddenly, the Wailord finished its dive and Mike found himself treading water. The massive Pokemon was nowhere in sight. Slugma struggled to stay afloat but the water caused it too much pain. Clyde was forced to recall it.

"No fair!" he yelled while flailing his arms.

Mike shot him a grin. Aron was happily swimming around in circles nearby.

"Aron, get Croconaw back!" Mike told it. Aron nodded and did a dolphin leap into the boat, landing with a thud on the wooden floor. Bonnie tried to grab it, but it dodged and metal clawed the ropes around the Pokemon. Croconaw tore what was left away with its mouth and then stood up. It nodded to Aron before diving headfirst into the ocean.

"Now Aron, use take down!" Mike yelled. Aron followed Croconaw into the water and smashed into the side of the boat, breaking a hole in it. Team Steam began to scream as the small sailboat sunk below the surface. Mike thanked his Pokemon and grabbed on as it swam him back to shore, Croconaw keeping up at his side. He retrieved Anson's skateboard as they went by it.

“Thanks for getting Croconaw back Mike! I owe you one,” Matt said when his Pokemon was returned to him. Mike nodded and handed the trainer’s the Pokeball sack. Everyone dug through it and retrieved their missing Pokeballs. Mike then gave Anson back his board.

"Thanks dude!" Anson said with grin.

"Well, I'm off! Kevin and I have a lot of traveling to do. The Tennis Tournament is held on an island that is several hundred miles away,” Matt said to Mike as he and Kevin turned to leave.

“Matt,” Mike said as his brother walked away. The black haired teen turned and faced him, waiting for what he had to say.

“I’m glad that you found a hobby that interests you. I hope you go far in it,” Mike said. Matt gave a crooked grin and gave his brother a thumbs up before turning and walking off.

The sun was setting and Mike and co saw that their ferry’s smoke pipe was blaring, signaling that it was leaving soon.

“Well Anson, this is where we part,” he said to his skater friend. Anson smiled and held out his hand. The two trainers clasped their palms together tightly.

"Good luck Mike!" Anson said with a grin. Mike returned the smile.

"See you around. Maybe we'll have a rematch someday!" he replied. The three friends then boarded the ferry as it began to head off, waving down to their new friend as it pulled away.

Next Chapter- Chapter 16: Mike and Tropius! Field of the Grass Types!
Mike finds a strong Tropius and wants to catch it. Will he? Find out in the next Chapter!

indigestible_wad
3rd September 2005, 2:16 AM
Mike dug through the sack and found the familiar greenish Poketech balls. He threw one hoping to get his Pokemon, but it opened up to reveal Amanda’s Skitty. Last time I checked, Ralts was the one in the tech ball.

Ah yes, family reunitement. Well, atleast they get along. But they didn't finish their battle! Oh well, I guess you had your reasons.

GoldenNoctowl77
3rd September 2005, 2:39 AM
Last time I checked, Ralts was the one in the tech ball.

Ah yes, family reunitement. Well, atleast they get along. But they didn't finish their battle! Oh well, I guess you had your reasons.

Oops, my mistake. LOL, thanks for catching it. And the battle wasn't finished because I didn't want to show who was the better battler this early in the series. They get along now, but if you were a fan of the original you would know that something happens in the later chapters, something bad ;)

GoldenNoctowl77
3rd September 2005, 4:00 PM
Wow, where did all my reviewers go :(. Two chapters and only one reviewer!

maximo
3rd September 2005, 4:22 PM
hay golden noctowl remember me one of youre old reviewer's and let me just say thank you for starting this up again i was gettig bored of the forums aswell but seeing this made me come on more and happy to see jeff's humour is still there the toxic parts made me laugh for age lol.

Anyway i'll be honest i aint read the chapters since i allready read up to the moonstone chapter and will continue to read when you pass that btu hang in there and keep writing and if you need ideas or reminders i remeber everything.

and hope to see mike catch one of those two pokemon he keeps seeing lol....

DANdotW
3rd September 2005, 9:11 PM
Wow, about 5 or 6 chapters that I haven't seen until now. Well, sorry for the complety poor review about to come, but...meh. I am remembering loads of these events as they come along. I remember the swimming Aron and the Ralts routine, the Poochyena, Pinnochio. It brings back how much I liked this last time round.

I also remember things to come: such as the moonstone that maximo mentioned, your great use of description on the Nature Power attack, Combusken learning Brick Break.

HG

GoldenNoctowl77
4th September 2005, 4:45 PM
Thanks for coming back to this fic guys! I'm happy to see that it hasn't been forgotten. I wonder where all my new reviers went though. It's been like 3 days and no reviews from them :/

GoldenNoctowl77
5th September 2005, 10:38 PM
Chapter 16 is almsot complete. It would have been done awhile ago, but I am slowing down my pacing so the reviewers that went AWOL have time to read the 2-3 chapters that they haven't gotten to yet. I wonder where everyone went :(

GoldenNoctowl77
6th September 2005, 7:47 PM
Chapter 16 is done but I am waiting to post it until I get more reviews for the chapters that are currently up. I want to move on, but I don't want people to fall behind! I'll give it another day until I post it. However, I get my wisdom teeth out tomorrow so things may change! COME BACK TO ME READERS!!!

Meganium
7th September 2005, 12:00 AM
Sorry I haven't posted in a while to respond to your comeback. I've been reading and like what I see. I especially like being able to re-read old jeff antics. Keep on writing and posting.

Nagashi
7th September 2005, 12:33 AM
Sorry I haven't reviewed for awhile, I've been busy. Ok, that was a lie, I've just been lazy. I'm glad moved away from the shiny cliche, and you made something nice and original. Yay!

Sike Saner
7th September 2005, 2:33 AM
Highlights of the Past Two Chapters:


"Hey Nuzleaf, go fetch!" Jeff said chucking Poochyena across the beach. He laughed to himself as Nuzleaf dove to catch the soaring Pokemon.


It stopped its pecking parade and flew down to mop up the granola goodness.

I just liked the phrase “granola goodness”.


"Warning- dangerous tides. Water reaches shore level once a week! No swimming!" it read. Jeff read it over a few times, thinking intently about what it meant.

“What the hell is a tide? I thought that was some sort of bleach,” he said and walked away.

*sigh* And I just bought these shoes, too, but, nonetheless, I simply must throw one at Jeff for that.


"Wow, an actual loss for Mike!" Jeff snickered. “And I thought God loved you.”


"Well then, can I have his Pokeballs?" she said holding out her hand. At this comment, Jeff broke into hysterical laughter.

That speaks ill of me, you know, that he immediately echoed the errant response of my own mind.


"Sounds good to me! Let's go to that Burger King we passed on the way here. You know, have it your way like the slogan!" Jeff recommended.

That made me picture Jeff dressed as the actual Burger King. Standing at someone’s window with a sandwich offering and just breathing. Ew.

What I liked about both of those chapters is that they contained a particulalrly high concentration of...hmm, action isn't presicely the word...Peril. Yes, that's what it was; there was plenty of it, and it was quite satisfying. I especially liked that Wailord scene. Boss work, there.

Ah, a Tropius in the next chapter? I look forward to that.

GoldenNoctowl77
7th September 2005, 3:25 AM
Well, I have gotten the replies I wanted (most of them) so here is chapter 16. You will also notice that the first post of this thread now contains a index that leads right to the chapter you want when you click one. Thanks to Sike Saner for explaining how to do that! Enjoy!

Chapter 16: Mike and Tropius! Field of the Grass Types!

Mike and his friends were now peering out over the miles of ocean on all sides of them on the deck of the ferry that would lead them to Moonfish Island, which was just coming into sight to the North. It looked very beautiful with its sloping hills and massive trees. Mike could tell that this next island was more tropical than the ones that they had come by so far.

The Wailord pod was surfacing in the distance for some air. Their blowholes let out massive spouts of water and their calming cries echoed over the ocean waves.

"Great Pokemon, aren't they?" a sailor with curly brown hair and a sleek body type commented while stepping towards the friends and joining them on leaning on the railing.

"Yeah, and I was on the back of one yesterday! They're huge!" Mike replied. The sailor smiled and walked a few feet away. He grabbed a mop that was leaning on the wall and started to scrub the deck.

"Mike, there's the harbor!" Amanda said pointing ahead. The island had come much closer in the short time that they had admired the Wailords. A quaint city was at the edge of it. Small buildings were surrounded by thick vegetation. The docking space was small, as if it only had room for a few vessels.

"Awesome! Time for my next badge," Mike said with a grin.

"Actually, there is no gym in Vineal City. The next one is on the other side of Moonfish Isle. It’s in a place called Cinder Town,” Amanda informed him. Mike took this in with a disappointed expression, but soon shrugged.

The ferry’s smokestack sounded as the tiny boat pulled up next to the dock. A few sailors on the mainland began to rope sections of the ship to keep it in place. Mike and his two friends walked down the exit ramp and onto the streets on the city once it was safely in place.

"Nice place!" Mike commented. The city looked more like a jungle. Every area had a different form of trees. There were towering evergreens in the distance, palm trees along the shoreline, shrubs against the sidewalks, and other forms of deciduous plants scattered throughout the spaces in between the buildings. There were little to no people roaming the streets, and not a single car on the road.

“All we need is Tarzan,” Jeff said rolling his eyes and beginning to do a Tarzan call.

"Well this is Vineal City. The Pokenav says they are known for their tree preservation rights. That’s why there are absolutely no cars on the road. They are banned from this place," Amanda informed Jeff while peering down at her pink contraption.

"Wow, I still say it’s pretty stupid. You would think that after two thousand years of development they would've ditched the trees and went with an urban setting," Jeff replied. Amanda shot him a look.

"Well, the journey to Cinder Town isn’t that long. It’s only a day’s walk from here,” she turned to Mike and changed the subject. “That is, after all, where the next gym is."

"Well then, let's head off!" Mike cut in. Jeff nodded in agreement. He didn’t feel comfortable in this forest-turned city.

The group walked for some time, leaving Vineal City as they went, but finding no salvation from the massive amount of trees. They were heading through a large valley in between two heavily forested hills. Soon the valley opened up into a very elegant field surrounded by forest on all sides. There were large ferns and bushes scattered through the place, and many other flowering type plants.

"What a place!" Mike said as they walked through it.

"It's so beautiful!" Amanda added in.

"What is this dump," Jeff said with no emotion at all.

"The Pokenav says we are in Gregrass Fields. It is a five mile field of flowers and trees that grass Pokemon love!" Amanda then informed them. Mike looked around, noticing instantly that she was correct. A group of small Pokemon with flowers on their heads called Bellossoms were dancing in the field together. The Pokemons’ elegant petal dresses swayed as they did their show.

"Wow, they're cute!" Amanda grinned.

"Yeah, if you like girly dancing Pokemon!" Jeff replied.

"I wouldn't be talking Jeff. I seem to remember that you're the one who has two grass Pokemon!" Amanda said grinning.

"Hey, grass Pokemon aren't bad," he replied. “It’s the ones that look like they have a monthly visitor and complain constantly that you have to watch for.”

Amanda was ready to pounce on him, but Mike placed a calming hand on her shoulder.

“Let’s take a little break before heading on. Okay?” he said. She nodded and folded her arms as Jeff did a jig around her. Mike pulled out a blanket and laid it on a section of the field that sloped down a few feet away. It overlooked the rest of the valley and was very beautiful. The sun was beginning to set in the distance as the day ended. Amanda sat down next to her friend and the two enjoyed the sunset.

“Where’s Jeff?” Mike wondered while turning his face towards her.

“He fell asleep a little further up the hill,” Amanda replied. She was peering at the ground now, as if something bothered her. Mike could tell that there was some tension brewing between them. He didn’t think it was the bad tension, but the awkward sexual one that poked in whenever a guy was alone with a girl he liked. Mike wanted to speak out; exclaim to Amanda how he felt about her; about how he has loved her since they met all those years ago. However, he was forced to hold this in. They had been friends for so long, and he didn’t want to make it any more awkward by declaring his love and ruining it if she didn’t feel the same way.

Amanda lifted her gaze and met his, causing Mike to turn away slightly. He gave off a smirk when his mind filled with Evan and Jaron’s “Crazy for this Girl” song.

“Would you look at her? She looks at me! She’s got me thinking about her constantly, but she don’t know how I feel!” he hummed to himself and then turned back to his friend.

“I’m getting a little homesick. I’ve talked to my mom a few times since we left, but I miss her warmth and constant paranoia for my safety,” he said.

“I don’t miss home much. I love my family, but it’s been nice traveling with you,” Amanda replied. Mike’s heart began to flutter.

“She carries on without a doubt. I wonder if she’s figured out, I’m crazy for this girl!” his mind sang.

“And Jeff. I guess journeying with that piece of crap has been amusing as well,” Amanda finished with a laugh. Mike drooped a bit and then peered out over the valley. Some small green grass Pokemon were hovering into the forest. Mike recognized them as Skiplooms. Their yellow flowers were twirling slowly to keep them afloat.

"Look at those!" Mike said pointing to them.

"Wow, their great," Amanda said taking in the fresh air and sounding enthusiastic. Mike continued to watch the Skiploom as they flew into the long grass. Suddenly, a large brown head of a Pokemon appeared just where the hill met the valley. The Pokemon’s body wasn’t visible to Mike, but it looked to be rather tall. Its neck was skinny and long, and it had a bushel of leaves in its mouth. It was munching on them much like how a cow eats grass.

"What's that?" Mike asked pointing to this new creature. Amanda turned and spied it also.

"Dunno," she replied. Mike pulled out his Pokedex and aimed it towards the creature, his mind erasing the current tune and focusing on the ding of the working contraption.

"Tropius; the fruit Pokemon. The bunches or fruit around Tropius's neck are very popular with children. This Pokemon loves fruit, and eats it continuously. Apparently, its love for fruit resulted in its own outgrowth of fruit," it explained.

"Wow, that's a really cool Pokemon!" Mike then said. "I'm going to catch one!"

Amanda gave him a look. "I don't know. It's really big and your Pokemon might not be able to handle it," she remarked with a concerned expression.

“Aww, let the little boy catch his giant fruit!" Jeff said approaching the two with a massive yawn. Mike grinned and stood up, then raced down the hill toward the Tropius. Amanda watched him go with a crooked smile spread across her face.

Mike reached the bottom of the hill to see the Tropius continuing to grazing in front of him. Its body was rather compact, with stubby legs and a brownish hide draping over its green underbody. Its back sprouted some long wings that looked strangely like ferns. Mike could tell that though this Pokemon was large, it could most likely lift itself into the air when needed.

Tropius’s head rose again as it lazily ate, the bananas under its chin rocking as its jaw chewed from side to side. The head towered over Mike and bits of grass fell onto his black hair.

"Wow!" Mike said in awe. The Pokemon took no notice of him and continued to graze. Mike pulled a Pokeball from his belt.

"Go Combusken!" he whispered. The ball opened in a flash of red light and Combusken appeared, but the giant Pokemon still took no notice of them.

"Okay Combusken, this Pokemon might be bigger, but you're stronger!" Mike whispered. Combusken nodded and turned to face it.


"Use flamethrower!" Mike then yelled, his voice changing its pitch to purposely make Tropius acknowledge them. Tropius finally turned as the blazing stream headed toward it.

With a quick maneuver, it took to the skies, dodging the attack.

"So it can fly!" Mike said without much surprise. The Tropius let out a shrill roar as its ferny wings flapped repeatedly. Mike pulled the Pokedex out again.

"While Tropius is a grass type, it also displays a rich flying type status as well," it muttered.

Tropius began to bellow and flew down towards Combusken. The fighting type stepped back a ways and contracted its leg muscles to prepare for impact.

"Dodge!" Mike commanded. Combusken quickly flung itself to the side, but with a swing of its mighty neck, Tropius sent Combusken into the sky. It landed with a thud on the valley floor and weakly pushed itself up.

"Combusken, stand up!" Mike pleased. Combusken regained its footing, but Tropius was already preparing its next move. It created a powerful tornado with its leaf wings and let it loose. Combusken was sucked into the wind funnel and squawked as it spun in a circle. Tears formed in its eyes, losing whatever dignity the Pokemon had before this battle.

"No!" Mike howled. The tornado began to fade and Combusken landed hard on the ground. With a final bellow, Tropius flew off towards the forest.

"Are you okay?" Mike asked his Pokemon and propped it up on his shoulder. Combusken weakly gave a small thumbs up.

"Take a rest buddy," Mike said and pressed its Pokeball to its head, enveloping it in a red light that pulled it back inside.

"Wow, nice try!' Jeff smirked from the top of the hill with folded arms. "Now hurry up and come back before I eat your sandwich!" Jeff took a bite from one and smiled a set of food covered teeth down at his friend.

"You think I'm giving up?" Mike asked with surprise. He then sprinted across the field after Tropius, which had landed a few yards down the valley.

"Fine, leave then! See if I care!" Jeff roared. He walked back to camp where Amanda was taking a rest after making the sandwiches.

"You know what? Both of you are very boring!" he screamed and chucked the remaining portion of his food onto her forehead. Amanda pulled the mustard soaked bread off of herself and shot him an angry look.

"I'm going to die a very angry man!" Jeff told her and sat down. He then grabbed Mike's sandwich from a plate and took a bite.

“And that will come very soon,” Amanda said with an evil look.

*******

Meanwhile, Team Steam lazily marched into Gregrass Fields with hunched backs and hands slumped to the ground.

"Wow, we're finally here!" Clyde said as they entered.

"A day's walk from that stupid city. Now we have all sorts of Pokemon to catch!" Bonnie smirked. She had read the sign that described Gregrass Fields back in Vineal City and suggested that they come here to steal what they could. She pulled something large from her pack. It was in the shape of a gun, with a long nozzle and a canister that she fastened over her back.

"Ready?" she asked Clyde.

"Of course!" Clyde said pulling the same object from his backpack. "How often do we get to use flamethrowers?"

***********

Tropius had now walked into a large oasis of fruit trees by a lake in the middle of the valley. It happily munched on some bananas from a tall tree as Mike stalked it.

"How am I going to catch you?" he though to himself. Tropius lazily ate as Mike watched it for some time, thinking hard on what he could do.

"Since you're part flying, I'll try Electrike!" he finally decided. He threw the Techball and Electrike appeared chasing its tail. It then spied Tropius and started to run toward it, barking with curiosity as it went.

"Stop!" Mike said pulling it back. "We need the element of surprise on this one buddy!"

Electrike nodded, and then leapt from his hands and into the oasis, barking madly as if it didn’t even understand what surprise meant. Tropius looked down and bellowed at the electric type as Mike put his hand to his forehead and sighed.

"So much for the element of surprise!" he screamed out, hoping to make Electrike feel bad. Electrike barked at the towering Pokemon until it stamped its foot. Electrike then whimpered and rushed back to its trainer, hiding behind his leg.

"Oh, now you want to stay hidden!" Mike roared as Electrike panted. Tropius lowered its head and sniffed Mike. With a giant bellow, it began to flap its leaves, creating another gust.

"Run!" Mike yelled and took off across the field. He didn’t even notice that Electrike wasn’t following him. It realized that it wasn’t hidden anymore and began to bark viciously at the long necked foe.

"Electrike, get over here!" Mike turned and yelled when he heard the barking. He put his foot down and pointed to his general area, trying to get it through his starter Pokemon’s thick head that it shouldn’t be meddling with an opponent that size.

Electrike didn't pay any attention and continued to bark. It was obviously not threatened by Tropius's size. The large Pokemon stepped backward and reared up, releasing the whirlwind. Mike watched in horror as his best pal was sucked inside, still barking as if it didn’t move at all.

"No!" Mike cried out and ran to help his Pokemon. Tropius bellowed and stamped the ground before taking flight and heading for the forest’s edge.

The whirlwind faded and Electrike began to fall, still in bark mode. Mike dove and caught the electric Pokemon in his hands.

"Are you okay?" he asked with a worried tone. Electrike leapt from his hands and angrily barked at the Tropius as it flew off.

"Maybe I shouldn't try to catch it," Mike said sadly and fell back exhausted. Before he could think, Electrike was rushing after Tropius, pumping its legs with static to keep up with it.

"Come back here!" Mike yelled leaping up and chasing it.

**********

Jeff had finished Mike's sandwich and was now sitting down trying to find entertainment. He picked up a stick and started to jam it into a hole in the ground before being swatted in the ear by something teal and tangled. The lanky teen shifted his eyes and noticed a small bluish Pokemon standing next to him. Its body consisted of a garbled mass of vines and its feet were red and looked like tennis shoes. Big round eyes peered back at him and it seemed to be happy as it hopped up and down.

"What do you want?" he asked it. It let out a cry and Jeff tossed the stick at it, poking the creature in the eye. It shrieked and waddled away.

"Ha-ha, yeah you better run!" Jeff yelled after it through cupped hands.

*********

Bonnie shoved the last Bellossom into the bag she was holding and grinned at Clyde. This task had been a workout, but the two managed to get every grass Pokemon in sight into the sacks. Clyde was becoming a pyro. He let loose the flamethrower into the forest, flushing out many grass Pokemon and catching the foliage on fire. The whole while he screamed like a lunatic while muttering inaudible phrases.

Slugma attacked the fleeing Pokemon when they ran out and Bonnie then stuffed them into the sacks. They were having a ball until a giant shadow flew over them. Bonnie looked up to see Tropius landing a few yards away. Clyde didn't seem to notice the new Pokemon. He was too busy letting off the flamethrower and giving evil laughs. Bonnie grabbed him and turned his attention to the massive Pokemon.

"Look! That’s a big time capture!" she remarked. Clyde smiled and clicked a button to refill his happy weapon.

Mike came up the hill to see Team Steam approaching the Pokemon he had been pursuing all day. Electrike was growling as it headed towards them.

"Great, I thought we wouldn't be seeing those two for a while!" Mike said angrily. Tropius bellowed as Team Steam approached it. It began to conjure up a whirlwind, but Clyde went loose with the flamethrower. It struck Tropius, which fell back hurting from the flames.

"Oh my god! They're going to kill it!" Mike said in shock. He ran up the hill flailing his arms.

“Cut it out!” he yelled at the two fire possessors.

"Oh great, not him!" Bonnie roared. She flung her free arm backward and let loose a Pokeball that erupted to release her Wooper.

"Take care of him!" she ordered and upped the flames of her weapon. Wooper nodded and leapt into the air, bringing its feet down on the ground. The ground shook under Mike and he toppled over. Electrike also began to stumble and even Team Steam was forced to halt their flaming joy.

"Stay out of this kid. This Tropius is now Team Steam property!" Bonnie stuttered from the Earthquake. Clyde regained his footing and pushed the button to activate his nozzle again. Heated flames erupted from the tip and covered the shrieking grass type.

Tropius bellowed in pain and collapsed on the ground, burn welts appearing all over its body. Mike was now filled with anger.

"You’re going to kill it!" he yelled with clenched fists. Bonnie shrugged and turned back to help Clyde.

"Electrike, quick attack!" Mike ordered. Electrike ran full speed into Wooper, knocking it backward. Mike then noticed the bag of Pokemon.

"Use bite on that bag!" he told Electrike. The electric Pokemon nodded and ran at it.

"Oh no!" Bonnie yelled as it approached the sacks behind her.

"Who cares about those Pokemon? We almost have this one!" Clyde cut in, hoping that he didn’t have to stop his fun to help her retrieve the other captured grass types. Electrike tore into the bag with its teeth and the grass Pokemon ran out, spilling back into the forest.

**********

Amanda noticed the smoke rising from up the hill and stood up.

“Something is wrong. I’m going to go check it out,” she informed Jeff.

“It’s probably just weed smoke from some hippie drum circle or something,” Jeff muttered back. Amanda sighed and raced up the slope to see what was occurring.

**********

"Now, let’s stop them!" Mike said as his starter Pokemon returned to his feet.

"What are you going to do?" Bonnie laughed and aimed her weapon at him. Mike noticed that the canister was reading empty. He smirked and then ran at her full speed, screaming at the top of his lungs.

"What are you doing?" she shrieked as he tackled her to the ground. The two tumbled down the hill, Bonnie screaming the whole way. Her flamethrower strap slit and the weapon and canister broke away. Clyde finally stopped his flamethrower and looked around.

"Bonnie?" he yelled. Tropius let out a weak bellow. It tired to stand up, but was obviously too hurt.

Mike leapt off of Bonnie at the bottom of the hill and ran back up. The Team Aqua Grunt whimpered as he went. Clyde watched as Mike appeared on top of the hill again. Bonnie came back seconds later, yelling like a madwoman.

"How dare you tackle me!" she screamed with her blonde hair sticking up in all directions through her bandana.

"Electrike, quick attack!" Mike ordered while ignoring the woman. Electrike rammed into Bonnie, sending her flying into Clyde.

"Now use spark!" Mike followed up. Electrike’s back began to jolt and it soon let off the ball of electricity, enveloping Team Steam in it. Clyde’s flamethrower burst in an explosion, and Team Steam was sent flying.

“No, my beautiful weapon of flaming goodness!” Clyde cried out as they disappeared.

Mike then turned his attention to the fallen Tropius. Its body was covered in burns and it was howling with pain. Mike knew he had to catch it and bring it to the Pokemon Center before it was too late.

"Now's my chance!" he whispered and pulled out a Pokeball.

**********

Jeff sat up from his rest on the blanket and peered around. The vine Pokemon was once again leaning toward him.

“What the hell are you? Some sort of stalker Pokemon?” Jeff asked the creature as it blinked its big white eyes. He then pulled his Pokedex from his pocket and held it toward the Pokemon.

“Tangela; the vine Pokemon. Blue plant vines cloak this Pokemon’s identity in a tangled mass. It entangles anything that gets close,” the Pokedex explained.

Jeff stood up and started to back away as the Tangela’s vine slowly wiggled towards him. Jeff then remembered what he learned on When Pokemon Attack. If an Ursaring ran away from a human when it screamed and chased it, then this creature would certainly do the same. He began to growl and ran at the Pokemon, causing Tangela to freak out and skip away up the hill.

**********

Mike wound his arm up and tossed the Pokeball at Tropius. The ball sailed through the air for a bit before striking a Pokemon and enveloping it in a red light. The sphere landed on the field and began to shake, but Mike noticed that Tropius was still bellowing on the ground. The Pokeball had struck a different Pokemon that was covered in blue vines. This Pokemon had been shrieking as it ran in the way of the Pokeball that soared towards Mike’s intended catch.

Mike watched the Pokeball shake a few times and then click into place. He stared at it with his mouth open and hand still extended. Suddenly, Tropius glowed brightly as it absorbed energy from the sun, using synthesis to heal itself. As Mike stood there too shocked to move, its burns wilted away and it stood up, reenergized. It took to the sky and flew into the forest, bellowing as it went.

Amanda had made it halfway up the hill where she stopped to have Mudkip put out a fire that was spreading across the forest’s edge. It was now taken care of, and she made it to the top of the hill to find Mike standing like a mannequin. Jeff came up the hill several seconds later panting from the climb.

"I saw the smoke. What happened?" Amanda asked her frozen friend. Mike didn't respond.

"Hello?" she yelled trying to get his attention. Mike’s lips quivered a bit before opening shallowly.


"Ball catch a running Tangela, no Tropius for Mikey!" Mike said in a shocked manner.

"What are you babbling about?" Amanda asked him, confused with his form of speech.

"Woops, that would possibly be my fault. I made the Tangela run this way!" Jeff said embarrassedly. Mike walked over and picked up the Pokeball.

"No Tropius, Mike have Tangela!" he gave a crazy grin.

"He's going insane!" Amanda whispered to Jeff. Mike released the Pokemon, which hopped up and down and peered at Mike with big bright eyes. It then ran up to its new trainer and rubbed against his leg.

"All that work and I catch a Tangela!" he roared and spun towards Jeff.

Jeff backed away as Mike approached him.

"Don't hurt me!" he screamed. Suddenly, Tangela ran ahead of Mike. It cried out and launched its vines as the lanky teen, tangling him up and lifting him into the air. Jeff screamed the entire time.

"Wow, it knows just what I wanted to do!" Mike smiled. "Maybe we'll get along well!"

Tangela squeezed Jeff as Mike laughed away. After some time, it let go and Jeff plummeted to the ground below.

"Punishment complete! Thanks Tangela!" Mike grinned.

"My spine!" Jeff yelled holding his back in pain. Amanda put a hand to her mouth and laughed. Mike then recalled his new Pokemon to its Pokeball.

"Ah well, no worries I guess. Tangela will work out fine. I have a good feeling. And maybe I’ll get another chance at a Tropius later. I have a gym to get to! Let's go!" he said and marched off down the hill. Amanda followed and Jeff dragged himself after…

Next Chapter- Chapter 17: Cinder Town Gym! A Flaming Outcome!
Mike finally has his 2nd gym match with the Cinder Town Gym Leader.

Sike Saner
7th September 2005, 4:13 AM
Highlights:


“Aww, let the little boy catch his giant fruit!" Jeff said approaching the two with a massive yawn.


“No, my beautiful weapon of flaming goodness!” Clyde cried out as they disappeared.


"Ball catch a running Tangela, no Tropius for Mikey!" Mike said in a shocked manner.

"What are you babbling about?" Amanda asked him, confused with his form of speech.

"Woops, that would possibly be my fault. I made the Tangela run this way!" Jeff said embarrassedly. Mike walked over and picked up the Pokeball.

"No Tropius, Mike have Tangela!" he gave a crazy grin.

Dang, Mike briefly stole the Spaz Scepter from Jeff there for a second, didn't he? Anyway, having Mike accidentally catch Tangela instead of Tropius was satisfyingly unexpected. Not only that, but Tangela seems to have a personality of a sort that I find very easy to like. Cute little things, Tangela.

DANdotW
7th September 2005, 11:28 AM
Yay, here comes the grass Pokémon. I've noticed something about the order of the Gyms and the order of Pokémon captures. Not sure if it is done purposefully, but I've noticed this:

First off, Mike fought in a Ground Type Gym, when all he had was Flying, Electric, and Fire, three types that don't do well against it. Now, he caught a Steel and a Grass and is about to go up against a Fire Type Gym. Is it just me, or does he seem to be fighting a lot of battles where he is at a disadvantage?

HG

GoldenNoctowl77
8th September 2005, 12:11 AM
Woah Hunting Guard. You realized something that I did not plan. What a wierd coincidence. GOOD EYE!

Well you guys, I know I said that I wouldn't be making chapters for a few days, but good news. I forgot I have a laptop so I'm now sitting in my bed with a swollen mouth and nothing to do. So I should be getting chapters done still. Chapter 17 is already started and may be up before the night is over!

GoldenNoctowl77
9th September 2005, 9:30 PM
A new chapter of Search for Knowledge will definitely be up tonight. If you haven't reviewed chapter 16 yet, please do!

GoldenNoctowl77
9th September 2005, 11:28 PM
Well, here's chapter 17 just like I promised. It's another gym battle chapter, and hopefull you like it more than the first! I think it turned out well after being redone.

Chapter 17: Cinder Town Gym! A Flaming Outcome!

Mike and his friends had finally arrived at Cinder Town, a quaint village with only a few office buildings. There was little to no residential areas, and the streets were almost completely empty. It had been two weeks since Alabor City, and Mike was now eager to compete for his second badge.

The three entered the city streets and looked around for any signs of life.

"Man, did someone just turn up the heat?" Jeff said panting and dragging himself along.

"It says that Cinder Town lies by a volcano, and so the magma deep under the ground heats the town up," Amanda read from the Pokenav. Mike peered up at the mountain that lied just to the west of the town. He had not noticed that the top peeked to what was indeed an active volcano.

"Yeah, but why couldn't it be snow or something.? Cold is better than heat! I'm going to die here!" Jeff replied. Amanda rolled her eyes.

"Jeff, if this town was snowy you would still be complaining. Besides, the gym isn't too far into the town. This place is only two miles in diameter," she riposted with an angry look.

Mike nodded and walked down the street. "Time to win me a badge!" he shouted to no one in particular.

"Well, well, well!" Bonnie smirked from atop a nearby building. "Looks like we landed in the right place at the right time!" She motioned for Clyde to look down at the city street where Mike and his friends were walking.

The two grunts had sailed through the sky from yesterday’s explosion for some time and landed in their current position atop a three story building a few hours ago.

Clyde leaned over the edge and peered down, nervously clinging to the edge of the roof. Their trip through the air had made him uneasy with heights.

"Why you say that?" he asked his companion. She turned and gave him a beating upside the head.

"Because the morons are right below us. We can get our revenge!" she roared. "Now dig through my pack and hand me my net!"

Clyde sighed and went over to her duffel bag, digging for some time before pulling out the giant net. The ends had ties that suggested that it was a fishing net that wrapped fish and pulled up when it was ready. Clyde had a sneak suspicion that Bonnie had stolen it from a sailor’s boat when they were in Vineal City. He handed it to her and the two walked back to the edge, preparing to throw it down when the time was right. Clyde tried not to look straight down for fear of freaking out and messing up the plan.

Mike and co were now passing under the office building that held Team Steam above. Bonnie cackled a bit and positioned her feet for better leverage.

"Now!" she yelled as the two hustled the net off the side. It made a lot of noise going down, hitting against the building and swaying back and forth as the two grunts tried to keep hold of the top end.

Down below, Mike heard a lot of commotion and instantly turned to Jeff, the bottom of his tennis shoes making a loud shuffling noise in the process.

“Jeff, what did you do?” he immediately inquired through suspicious eyes. Jeff’s face went from passive to angered and he glared back at his friend.

“Oh, so when a large amount of noise is heard, you automatically think I have something to do with it?” he barked. “That sounds more like a net falling at high speeds from the top of a building! How would I have anything to do with that?”

Mike peered at his friend with very confused eyes. “How the hell do you know what a net falling at high speeds from the top of a building sounds like?” he demanded to know.

“Because I used to play snag the nerd from the rooftops back home with an old fishing net my dad had. Those were grand times! The unsuspecting pale skinned, poorly groomed, smart people would try to conjure up an explanation to what they heard before being caught in a net and listening to me laugh.”

Mike rolled his eyes. He wasn’t sure why the hell he became this kid’s friend so long ago. He was the most obnoxious person he knew. Pride aside, Mike decided to see if Jeff’s theory was correct. He tilted his head upwards, putting his arm up to shield the hot sun’s glare. He noticed a long webby object falling from above.

“Well, I’ll be damned-” he began to say before the net landed on top of them. Amanda screamed and fell down while clawing at the contraption. Mike was trying to pull it off but Jeff just stood there with a grin spread across his face.

“And you thought I was lying. Suck on them apples Mikey-boy!” he bragged.

"Now pull them up!" Bonnie screamed with delight. The two wrapped the rope tightly around their hands and began to heave. Mike and Jeff both lost their footing as the net tightened around them and flew a few feet into the air.

"What is this?" Mike asked while shoving his leg forward and hitting Jeff in the head. He pretended to be struggling, but he really wanted to hit his friend for his rude comments.

"I feel like a fish," Jeff remarked while twisting his thin body in whatever direction he could.

"I can't reach my belt! If I could, then I could have one of my Pokemon get us out of here," Mike said trying to maneuver his arm to get to a Pokeball.

"Well your belt is right in my face, along with another very awkward area," Amanda blurted out from a few inches below him. She was positioned at eye level to Mike's belt, but also his crotch.

"Very embarrassing position if I do say so myself!" she declared and squirmed around.

"Ha, you know you like it!" Mike joked. "Now, grab one of my balls!"

"Sick!" Amanda roared.

"You know what I mean!" Mike laughed, amused with himself.

“No way! It’s too embarrassing to put my hand over there!” Amanda retorted while trying even harder to get herself away.

“Hell, I’ll do it!” Jeff cut in with a friendly tone.

“NO!” both Mike and Amanda said in unison. The female teen sighed and wiggled her arm towards Mike’s belt, grabbing a random Pokeball and quickly pulling away. She jiggled her hand through a hole in the net and dropped the ball to the street below.

It landed with a pop on the ground and Mike's new Tangela formed. It blinked its big white eyes and looked around, noticing that it seemed to be alone.

"Hey Tangela!" Mike yelled down, his nose now pinned against the netting so tightly that his voice sounded muffled. The Pokemon looked up and began to jump, happily responding to its master's call.

"Cut these nets for me buddy!" Mike commanded. Tangela cried out and released a razor leaf barrage, the sharp objects soaring right at them.

"What does it think it's doing?" Bonnie roared from above. Her and Clyde tried to pull faster, but the leaves were moving too fast. The razor leaf slashed at the net and the group found themselves falling from the hole that formed. Tangela’s eyes went wide and it shrieked, trying to get out of the way before it was crushed. Mike gripped the netting as he fell, causing it to come down with him.

With the sudden jerk, Bonnie and Clyde sprawled over the edge of the roof. Mike tossed the part of the net he held up onto a street lamp when he hit the ground. Team Steam stopped falling but became tangled in the netting as it spiraled around the post.

"Ha, I had a feeling that it was you two that did this! I hate to leave you hanging, but I have a gym match to get to," Mike laughed at them and recalled Tangela to its Pokeball. Jeff walked over to the two and spit up at them before joining his friends as they walked off.

"You'll be sorry!" Clyde threatened as they went, spit dripping from his eye.

*********

“Well, the gym should be right around this corner,” Jeff said holding his Pokenav out in front of his face.

“Amanda, just take your Pokenav out. Jeff has been saying that at every turn we made today. He has no idea how to read that map,” Mike said with a glare to his mentally challenged friend.

Amanda let out a small laugh and then pulled her own Pokenav out. “Well, we’re close. Jeff said it’s around that corner, but it’s actually around the corner across the street from there,” Amanda smiled. “Jeff, learn to read a map man. Seriously.”

“Ha, when am I ever going to need one? I have you for directions,” he replied. Amanda sighed and put a hand to her forehead.

“I’m not always going to be with you to help you,” she said. The group finally rounded the corner and came upon a large building at the end of the street. It was bigger than any other place they had seen since they entered the town, and its brick was red and black. Mike pushed the gate open and walked inside, noticing very quickly that small pools of lava were flowing through the front yard.

“That is most likely illegal,” he remarked as the three headed towards the steps.

Mike jogged up and pushed aside the large, creaky doors. It was even hotter inside the gym than outside in the town. He took one step forward before a small volcano erupted several feet in front of him. It turns out they were in front of the battlefield, which was covered in lava pits that erupted constantly. Torches burned brightly on the red soiled walls. It was like walking into a building that was inside a volcano.

"Who's there?" a voice called out from above. Mike looked up to see a young man with red hair and a muscular body. A ponytail slung down his side and ended by his waist. He leapt from the platform that he was on and landed in front of Mike. Mike now noticed that the man’s skin was darkened and parts looked burned.

“Dude, what the hell happened to you?” Jeff chirped up with no regard for being polite. Amanda pulled the teen back and glared into his eyes.

“Be cool Jeff. He may not be very attractive, but that was totally rude,” she said.

“But he looks like he was in the oven too long! Can’t I poke him or something?” Jeff whined.

"I'm Mike, and I am here for a gym battle!" Mike informed the scarred gym leader.

"Well then, why don't we get this party started?" he said with a laugh. "The name's Arson and I'm the Cinder Town Gym Leader!" He extended a bandaged hand that covered many more burn scars. Mike reluctantly shook it.

Arson suddenly swatted something away. He turned to see Jeff holding a stick next to him and peering at his burn scars.

“I don’t mean to be rude, but may I ask how you got those burns?” Mike inquired. Arson’s tongue rolled out of his mouth and licked his dry lips. He then smiled and smashed his bandaged hand on Mike’s back with a laugh.

“Everyone always wants to know! I’m not ashamed of my scars. It just shows how much I enjoy the heat, and how strong I am to take it in. I’m a geologist on the side. I study the active volcano above Cinder Town,” Arson explained. “The town hasn’t been the same since the eruption twenty years ago though. Most people moved out and only a few stayed. But we’ll have time to discuss this after the match. Is a two on two Pokemon battle ok with you?"

“That’s fine,” Mike nodded.

"Ref, get in here!" Arson suddenly roared, his voice going from friendly to forceful. A small old man appeared with flags, his clothing tattered and his face wrinkled.

"Get to your post grandpa!" Arson laughed. The old man did as ordered.

Arson took his side of the field and Mike went to the other. "You know the rules! They aren’t any different than the other gyms," Arson commented. Mike nodded.

"I choose you, Quilava!" Arson said throwing the Pokeball. Mike reached into his belt and pulled out one of his own.

"Go Taillow!" Mike roared. The ball erupted and Taillow blazed straight up into the sky.

"Hmm, interesting choice!" Arson laughed. His Pokemon had also formed on the field. It resembled a ferret, with a pale beige underbody and a furry black back. Small fire pits burbled from the Pokemon’s head and posterior.

"Quilava, use flame wheel!" Arson commanded. Quilava nodded and activated the lava pits on its body, causing flames to flare up. It then released a spinning arch of fire.

"Taillow, dodge and use wing attack!" Mike countered. Taillow spun out of the way and smashed into Quilava. A bruise appeared across the Pokemon's face.

"Don't take that!" Arson roared. "Use quick attack!" Quilava spun around to face Taillow and in a blinding flash of speed, it leapt into the air and struck Taillow hard, its head smashing into the bird’s stomach and causing it to squawk.

"Are you ok?" Mike asked. Taillow began to lose altitude, but it flapped its wings and brought itself back into the air. It was a little stunned, but could continue.

"Use your quick attack!" Mike then ordered. Taillow zoomed full speed at Quilava, but the fire type rolled to the side to dodge.

"Sorry bud, but Quilava is a speedy Pokemon!" Arson laughed. "Quilava, flamethrower!"

The Pokemon released the streaming blaze straight at Taillow.

"Taillow, use double team!" Mike yelled. Taillow created copies of itself and the flames hit a fake one, causing it to evaporate as quickly as it had been made.

"Now, wing attack!"

Taillow flashed by Quilava, smashing its wing into its gut. Quilava cried in pain and flew backwards.

"Quilava, get up!" Arson yelled. The Pokemon was on its feet again. It spun its head to get out of the daze. It was breathing heavily and Mike could tell it was hurting.

"Ok, use another flame wheel!" Arson ordered.

"Double team!" Mike countered. The familiar group of Taillows emerged, forming a circle around Quilava. Quilava only grinned before aiming its head upwards and launching the flaming wheel. Mike had not expected this. Usually a flame wheel comes out from a forward position with its top pointing up and spinning like a wheel, but because Quilava aimed up, the wheel was now spinning like a top. The fire attack enveloped every single Taillow and Mike watched the real one fall to the ground in pain.

Taillow was trying hard to stand back up. One eye was shut and its beak was clenched together. It was willing to make one last stand for its trainer.

“Taillow, try another wing attack!” Mike ordered. He felt bad for making the Pokemon continue, but it was up and willing, so he had to try. Taillow tried to fly again, but its injuries kept it grounded. Its wing began to glow and the tiny bird rushed across the volcanic field toward Quilava.

“Quilava, run to the right corner of the field,” Arson smiled. Mike knew why he was so confident. Quilava went to the position. Taillow was running right at it, but a volcanic pit separated the two. If Taillow continued, it would run right into it.

“Taillow, stop the attack!” Mike ordered. Taillow screeched to a stop and looked at its trainer, trying to figure out why he wanted it to halt.

“Swift!” Arson demanded. Quilava went from standing upright to standing on all fours. It then opened its mouth and launched a barrage of fast moving stars. Taillow turned back to its opponent but was flung across the field from the impact of the star attack. It landed facing its trainer and peered up at him, as if to apologize for failing. It then closed its eyes and was unable to get up.

Mike saw the ref hold the left flag up, signaling a win for Quilava.

"Return!" Mike yelled and recalled his Pokemon. He peered at the Pokeball with a sad expression. He felt bad for pushing his Pokemon that far, and now he had only one Pokemon to make a come back with.

"Well now, getting worried?" Arson said with a cocky laugh.

"Not on your life," Mike lied through chattering teeth and threw another Pokeball. Electrike appeared on the volcanic field and began to chase its tail.

"Not now Electrike," Mike sighed grabbing his head and putting it down in embarrassment. Electrike stopped and growled happily at its trainer. It then noticed one of the lava vents and went over to inspect it. The fire launched from the hole and Electrike fell back yelping.

"You think Electrike can win?" Amanda asked Jeff.

"You asked me that at the last gym match bimbo!" Jeff replied. "But this looks pretty bad!"

Amanda ignored his other comment and nodded in agreement.

"Electrike, use quick attack!" Mike started round two.

"Quilava, use your quick attack!" Arson commanded. Both Pokemon blazed towards each other at full speed, Electrike going a bit faster by electrifying its leg muscles.

With a quick dodge to the side, Electrike broke away from Quilava’s attack. The fire type landed hard against the ground and Electrike sent itself smashing into Quilava’s side. The Pokemon rolled a bit, and then weakly got up.

"Thunder wave!" Mike followed up. Tinny circles of electricity emitted from Electrike and hit Quilava, spreading across the Pokemon’s body like a web. Quilava tried to move, but its body was now paralyzed.

"Now spark that Pokemon for Taillow!" Mike yelled, hoping his fallen Pokemon would forgive him. Electrike let off the ball of electricity.

"Dodge!" Arson commanded. Quilava tried, but the paralysis held it in place. The spark made contact and Quilava cried out in pain. Static still sparkled from it as it slumped to the ground and didn’t get up. The fire from its body cackled before going out.

"Return!" Arson angrily said. His first Pokemon was enveloped in a red light and was sucked back inside its Pokeball.

"All tied up,” Mike said while looking straight at the red headed gym leader’s scarred face.

"Yes, but you're about to lose!" Arson replied throwing a Pokeball. A small, yellow, camel Pokemon formed. It had a very dopey disposition, with two big white eyes. Mike didn’t get how this Pokemon could be much of a threat, but he decided to scan it with the Pokedex just to be safe.

"Numel; the numb Pokemon. Numel is extremely dull witted- it doesn't notice being hit. However, it can't stand hunger for even a second. This Pokemon's body is a seething cauldron of boiling magma," Mike's Pokedex read.

"Wow, sounds like a challenge!" the black haired teen laughed.

“It sounds more like Jeff to me,” Amanda giggled.

“Hey-” Jeff began to say. “What did you just say? I’m hungry,” he then finished the statement.

"You're in for a shock boy!" Arson declared.

"Electrike, use spark!" Mike yelled. Electrike growled as it charged up the electricity, sending another ball of static at its opponent. Numel didn’t budge and Arson made no motion to have it do anything. The spark hit Numel who just stood there as if nothing occurred.

“It’s okay. It just takes it a few seconds to feel pain,” Mike decided to himself, but was starting not to believe it.

“Get the picture yet Mikey? Numel, use magnitude!" Arson ordered. Numel sat there for a few seconds, and then got the order through its head. With a smash of its foot, Electrike was sent flying across the ground as it rumbled underneath.

"It knows ground attacks?" Mike asked in shock.

"Of course, seeing as how Numel is part ground type," Arson remarked.

"Electrike, electricity won't work. We have to focus on your physical attacks! Use tackle!" Mike yelled, sweat now forming on his forehead. Electrike nodded and rushed in to attack. Its carefree attitude was still present even while its trainer was worried as hell.

Electrike smashed into Numel, but the camel Pokemon didn't seem to feel the pain.

"Magnitude again!" Arson grinned. Once again, the ground below began to quake and Electrike was sent flying.

"Get up buddy, we can still win this!" Mike yelled. He didn’t really believe it anymore, and he was now realizing that he was pushing his starter as much as Taillow before.

"Oh no you can't!" Arson pointed and laughed. Mike watched in horror as Numel began to glow, growing larger and taking the form of a new Pokemon. This Pokemon was blood red with bluish swirls along its side. It had two volcanic humps and a stubby tail. It did not look as dull-witted as Numel. In fact, it looked as if it could now think like a normal Pokemon.

"Camerupt; the eruption Pokemon. Camerupt has a volcano inside its body. Magma of 18,000 degrees Fahrenheit courses through its body. Occasionally, the humps on this Pokemon's back erupt, spewing the superheated magma," his Pokedex read.

"This is over!" Arson said laughing. "Earthquake!"

Camerupt roared and smashed its coal colored hoof to the ground, sending a crack through the volcanic field that caused the whole arena to rumble. The fault in the field was heading straight toward Electrike. The Pokemon barked at it, trying to get the crack to turn away, but Mike knew that wouldn’t stop it. If Electrike took the attack, he would never forgive himself.

Mike ran onto the rumbling field and picked his Pokemon up before the attack connected.

"I fold," the teen said sadly.

"Ha, nice decision kid!" Arson laughed and placed an arm on his newly evolved Pokemon’s lower back.

Amanda looked on saddened. "He wasn't ready," she said. Jeff looked at her with concern.

“Wasn’t ready for what? I dozed off a bit. What happened?” he asked.

Arson recalled Camerupt to its Pokeball and walked across the field towards Mike.

"Come back when you can really battle kid!" he said taking a bandage on his hand and wrapping it tighter. He then turned and walked towards the set of doors that must have led to his stay room.

*********

Mike sat in the Pokecenter lobby waiting for Electrike and Taillow to be healed. It was now three am and he couldn't sleep. He was beating himself up for losing and for pushing his Pokemon too hard.

"How could I lose?" he muttered to himself while sitting in a small chair. He then grabbed his polo shirt and put it back on over his t-shirt. He left the center and into the steaming city streets. There wasn't much there, but he needed some air.

He walked for some time, and then found a twenty-four hour drug store on a corner. He walked inside and selected a candy bar, and then he approached the desk.

"That'll be one dollar," the cashier said and peered at the saddened boy. Mike handed her the money and left. He opened the chocolate and ate it quickly.

"It’s been a long time since I've had one of you," he muttered to the empty wrapper. This comment was true. Mike didn’t eat sweets too often anymore. They were only something he would buy when he was feeling down, and this was one of those times.

Suddenly, Amanda appeared at the front of the Pokemon Center. He saw her and walked over.

"I saw you leave," she whispered with concern.

"Yeah, I had to get some air." he replied.

"Look, you gave it your all today. We can leave and come back when you're ready," she suggested.

"NO!” Mike found himself raising his voice for no reason. He felt bad as soon as he said it. Amanda was just trying to be helpful and he had yelled at her.

“I am not leaving this town until I beat him," Mike told her, this time with a calm voice.

Amanda was a little taken aback. She forced a smile and then peered up at her friend’s blue eyes.

"Well how do you propose to do that?" she inquired.

"I'll find a way, mark my words!" he replied with a smile.


Next Chapter- Chapter 18: The Problem Solved! Pokemon Fishing!
Mike stumbles upon a fishing store, where he tries his luck at catching a water Pokemon.

Sike Saner
10th September 2005, 12:01 AM
Highlights:


“Oh, so when a large amount of noise is heard, you automatically think I have something to do with it?” he barked. “That sounds more like a net falling at high speeds from the top of a building! How would I have anything to do with that?”

Mike peered at his friend with very confused eyes. “How the hell do you know what a net falling at high speeds from the top of a building sounds like?” he demanded to know.

“Because I used to play snag the nerd from the rooftops back home with an old fishing net my dad had. Those were grand times! The unsuspecting pale skinned, poorly groomed, smart people would try to conjure up an explanation to what they heard before being caught in a net and listening to me laugh.”

Ah, "Snag the Nerd". Yet another activity worthy of global pastime status courtesy of Jeff.


"I can't reach my belt! If I could, then I could have one of my Pokemon get us out of here," Mike said trying to maneuver his arm to get to a Pokeball.

"Well your belt is right in my face, along with another very awkward area," Amanda blurted out from a few inches below him. She was positioned at eye level to Mike's belt, but also his crotch.

"Very embarrassing position if I do say so myself!" she declared and squirmed around.

"Ha, you know you like it!" Mike joked. "Now, grab one of my balls!"

*dies* Good grief...

So, it looks like there'll be a rematch with Arson on the horizon. Good, I like him. Plus, Jeff will get another opportunity to poke him with a stick. This isn't the first of your Gym Leader characters I've liked, though. It makes me look forward to the introduction of more of your Gym Leaders.

Kthleen
10th September 2005, 3:03 AM
"All tied up,” Mike said while looking straight at the red headed gym leader’s scared face.Do you mean "scarred"? From what I can tell of his personality, Arson doesn't seem to be one to get put on actual frightened faces.


Nice. It's quite fun, though the humor is a little off for my taste. I like how the battles are done and the Pokémon's personalities. I'll definitely keep reading.

GoldenNoctowl77
10th September 2005, 3:23 AM
Do you mean "scarred"? From what I can tell of his personality, Arson doesn't seem to be one to get put on actual frightened faces.


Nice. It's quite fun, though the humor is a little off for my taste. I like how the battles are done and the Pokémon's personalities. I'll definitely keep reading.

Ha, finally a reader that doesn't like my humor! Ha, I know you probably think I'm weird, but I admire you for that. LOL. My humor is perverted and crude, yet that's what most people, including myself find funny. I like to see someone who reads my fic for other reasons. I know a lot of my readers enjoy the fic outside of Jeff, but he seems to be the main attraction. Thanks for the review.

And Sike, always on the ball! I love your reviews as well. I love to hear feedback on what I did right. I'm glad I have people that enjoy my humor too! LOL

indigestible_wad
10th September 2005, 5:53 AM
I haven't been online for a while, so you can't really blame me for not reviewing.

I don't really like how mike catches wild pokemon. He just goes up and tries to battle them without any concent to how they feel about it. The tropius only attacked mike out of self defence. I guess in some ways I feel that mike got what he deserved catching tangela.

And losing a battle? Somehow I knew it would happen when tailow fainted.

DANdotW
10th September 2005, 3:22 PM
Great chapter, GN. It's good to see main characters losing every once in a while. Cool how you described the part ground type and the realisation. Can't wait for the next chapter, although I can't remember which Pokémon Mike caught in the end. *Sits down and begins to think*

HG

Kthleen
10th September 2005, 10:00 PM
I don't really like how mike catches wild pokemon. He just goes up and tries to battle them without any concent to how they feel about it. The tropius only attacked mike out of self defence. I guess in some ways I feel that mike got what he deserved catching tangela.That's true of many Pokémon trainers, however. Remember Ash's "Enjoy your last moments of freedom, Pidgey, 'cause you're mine!"? When he battled Chikorita till it couldn't stand? (He cared eventually, but still did it.) When Misty blasted poor Oddish after it tried to run away scared? The Bug-catching contest? When May and Drew were after that mother Arcanine? "Hey, wanna be my friend?" (without luring them with food) is probably in actuality a somewhat unusual way to catch a wild or feral Pokémon, so unless one is obviously distressed, a person is unlikely not going to think twice about the find+battle+catch method. (Even then, they may want to catch it to take it to a Pokémon center for help, then they would have a new Pokémon/perhaps friend.) Also, Pokémon don't really seem to want to be captured anyway (though battling appears to be "in their blood"), despite the fact that most that we see look like they accept being caught afterwards. I do understand what you were getting at, though.

Meganium
10th September 2005, 10:37 PM
Great chap again. Although I know whats to come, I can't wait to see this chapter. It sucks Mike lost, but i think he'll comeback stronger than ever.

Nagashi
11th September 2005, 12:48 PM
Amanda informed Jeff while peering down at her pink contraption.

...Sorry, I just had to laugh at that. XD

I'm liking these chapters, but there really does seem to be too many exclamation marks, and I spotted a few grammar mistakes in there somewhere. Keep it up, though!

GoldenNoctowl77
11th September 2005, 7:57 PM
...Sorry, I just had to laugh at that. XD

I'm liking these chapters, but there really does seem to be too many exclamation marks, and I spotted a few grammar mistakes in there somewhere. Keep it up, though!

Ha, well I use exclamation parts a lot when people are shouting. And the three teens love to shout at each other and during battle scenes, the trainer's usually yell out the attacks. They don't just say them, so using exclmation parts is a must. That is why there are so many.

GoldenNoctowl77
18th September 2005, 4:24 PM
Just letting you all know that Search for Knowledge will have a new chapter soon. The reason that it is taking so long is because I have started a new and completely original Pokemon fic. If you would like a good read before the next chapter, head over to the link in my sig for More Than A Fight.

Kthleen
18th September 2005, 10:59 PM
Yes! I was just about to ask when you were going to update. I can't wait.

More Than A Fight is interesting, too.

Smeargle_artist
5th October 2005, 1:43 AM
I read your fic and it was greeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaat. But does it end there??

GoldenNoctowl77
1st May 2006, 12:56 AM
I know you all are going to kill me for disappearing for a few months, but I was the busiest person alive. I had full time college, work, and partying to do. It didn't leave much time to write, and it has shown over the past few months. But guess what! Summer is here (college is over for now) and I have extra time. What does this mean? My fics will be starting back up!

(any writing time I had over the past few months was devoted to rewriting Apocalypse Rising, which I might repost with the improvements)

So, look forward to the continuation of Search for Knowledge and my other fics soon. I'll give you a little time to catch back up before dropping new chaps on you!

FANS, RETURN TO MY BUTTERY GOODNESS!

firewater
1st May 2006, 3:07 AM
wow this story is great i just finished reading it and it is really funny. good story though

GoldenNoctowl77
2nd May 2006, 5:15 AM
NEW CHAPTER TOMORROW, MAY 2nd!

I know you all must be excited. I'm warning you though, this isn't the best comeback chapter. It's pretty good, mind you, but I quit so suddenly that the chapter that I am coming back with is not super climatic and stuff. It's still a good read though as it involves a capture!

FANS RETURN TO ME!

ribonucleic
2nd May 2006, 6:40 AM
wow so after 5 month this story is coming back. before i joined I used to readthis story and considered one of my favourites on serebii due to Jeff.

When u stopped writing this story, i went to another site which had the older version of this story and i read all of the chapters. I am glad this story is starting up again.

IceKing
2nd May 2006, 12:00 PM
Awesome! You're back =P I'll be sure to finish reviewing you this weekend (this week is performance finals and AP exams)

Was my PM what inspired you to post?

GoldenNoctowl77
3rd May 2006, 6:30 AM
Well here you are, the long awaited return of Search for Knowledge, coming back from a 5 month MIA!

Chapter 18: The Problem Solved! Pokemon Fishing!

Mike was now sitting propped up against a wall in the Cinder City Pokemon Center. Amanda, who had succumbed to the effects of sleep, was now lying with her head on his lap. Mike looked down at her sleeping figure and smiled, his hand coming up from its position on the floor to stroke her hair.

“What are you doing?” Amanda whispered while still half asleep.

“Nothing,” Mike replied and lowered his hand. Amanda snickered and then closed her eyes once more. Mike wished that he could fall asleep as well, but the torment of his gym battle was still fresh in his delicate mind.

Jeff came out of a door near the hall behind the front desk and peered at the two.

"Am I the only person here who knows what a bed is? We paid for a room so we might as well use it," he spoke the obvious with his eyes bulging open.

"Although I am completely surprised that you are awake, my friend, I‘m just going to say yes to your question in hopes that you will go away," Mike retorted while rolling his eyes.

“I don’t go away. I’m like herpes,” Jeff retorted.

“What time is it” Amanda sat up suddenly and looked around.

“Noon,” Jeff answered as if she should already know.

“What the heck! I never sleep in this late,” Amanda squealed and leapt up. Mike pushed his knees up in surprise.

“You should try it. It’s soothing,” Jeff responded.

Nurse Joy appeared from the hallway. Taillow was on her shoulder and Electrike was at her feet. Both Pokemon looked healthy.

"Hey guys! How ya’ feeling?" Mike asked while getting up. Taillow flew onto his shoulder and began to peck away at his head. "This time I deserve that!"

Electrike yelped and rubbed against its master’s leg. "Nice to see you're feeling better. Sorry I pushed that battle on you," Mike apologized. Electrike just happily barked.

"Wow, what a touching moment. Let me go vomit!" Jeff yapped sarcastically.

Nurse Joy took a small bow and then returned to her desk where some posters were neatly stacked. She pulled one off of the desktop and walked over to the wall nearest the door, beginning to prop one on it.

Mike was intrigued by the picture of a Seaking flailing on a fishing line. "Water Pokemon Fishing; fish all day for only 20 bucks!" it read in big aqua-colored letters above the fish Pokemon.

"Hmm, fire and ground types are both weak against water. If I had a water type, Camerupt wouldn't stand a chance against me!" Mike grinned. "I think I found a solution!"

He turned to the others and smiled.

"What, you going to beg Arson or suggest sexual favors?" Jeff asked.

"No, eww, just eww.” Mike responded with a look of disgust before pointing to the wall. “Look at the sign!"

"Can't see without my contacts, love. It looks like some fat lady with an upside down ice cream cone on her head with the words Rolenom Elsding," Jeff replied.

“Yes Jeffrey! All of us are going to go watch a fat lady with an ice cream cone on her head do Rlenom Elsding!” Amanda said sarcastically.

"Who cares, let's just go!" Mike remarked.

He then took out a pen and paper and wrote down the directions from the sign. The three trainers then walked outside the center, Jeff putting in his contacts before leaving.

"It looks like this place is just outside the town!" Mike commented. The teens pressed on, noticing that the road was becoming incredibly steep.

"What, are we going to fish in the volcano?" Jeff asked while pointing up towards Cinder Volcano in the distance. The three teenagers were beginning to scale the base of it. Mike and Amanda ignored him like always and walked on.

Suddenly, the loud sounds of a battle were heard just up the road and to the left. Mike ran towards it, sprinting up to a public recreation center and around a corner to see two kids dueling on a basketball court.

"Sneasel, use slash!" a teenage boy with long green hair ordered. His small black Pokemon raced towards its foe, its long nails stretched out for the kill.

"Sableye, dodge and use shadow ball!" the blonde girl followed up. The purple Pokemon with gems for eyes disappeared and reappeared behind Sneasel. It pulled back its hands, laughing as it sucked in energy to create a black orb.

"Two dark Pokemon in a fight to the death!" Jeff said with happiness in his voice.

"I don't think they are killing each other-" Mike replied.

“I SAID DEATH!” Jeff cut him off. Amanda rolled her eyes and made a crazy gesture with her finger.

Sableye let the orb go and it smashed into Sneasel, blowing the Pokemon backward and into the pole of the basketball net, taking it out. The two trainers walked to the center of the court and shook hands. The green haired teen then recalled his fallen Pokemon and walked inside the building.

Jeff was instantly running to the blonde female. "That was an oh-so dynamically cool match!" he said to the trainer.

“Somehow I knew that Jeff trying to use descriptive adjectives would just sound lame,” Amanda said to Mike.

"Well of course it was. All dark battles are dynamically cool, as you put it,!" the girl replied, her back turned to Jeff and her face buried in her knapsack.

"Wow, you train dark types? They're my specialty too, though I have never had a dark battle yet," Jeff replied.

"Well then, the name's Candice, and I'll be your first!" she smiled.

“Wait, my first dark battle or my first-” Jeff started to say, but Amanda smacked the back of his neck to cause the rest of his speech to slur.

"Go on ahead guys. I'll catch up!" Jeff turned to them and whispered, still feeling the effects of Amanda’s attack.

Amanda shook her head. "Guess we might as well, this could take a while.” Her and Mike left the court and continued down the road.

"How 'bout a two on two match?" Jeff grinned.

"Fine by me, in fact, let's make this a double battle!" Candice grinned.

"Double battle?" Jeff asked in confusion. “That’s not sexual is it?”

"It's where we both use two Pokemon at once dimwit!" Candice laughed, ignoring Jeff‘s second question.

Jeff nodded and reached into his pocket for two Pokeballs. "Go Nuzleaf and Poochyena!" he said throwing the Pokeballs. They landed on the ground, both opening to form into his dark types.

"I choose you, Sableye and Murkrow!" Candice followed up. Her familiar purple gem-eyed ghost appeared and a black crow with a witch hat formed next to it.

~~~~~~

Mike and Amanda had found the fishing hut. They both were now standing in front of it, staring at the rundown sign and the mold on the walls.

"This is the place," Mike said wearily. Amanda seemed a bit disgusted. They were afraid to move for a few seconds as a portion of the roof had slid off the moment they had arrived.

“Um, dare you to go inside,” Amanda finally spoke up while placing her hand towards the door.

“Fine,” Mike replied and walked forward, his foot getting caught on a broken step as he did so.

The teen placed his hand on the doorknob and turned, hearing the creak of the hinge as the door swung open. Inside was an old greasy man with a white tank top on. He was sitting behind a counter and laughing at a small television in the corner of the room.

"What can I do you for?" he asked while turning to the two, his yellow teeth exposed.

"Um, I'd like to fish!" Mike whispered slowly.

"Well then Mr-"

"Mike, my name's Mike," Mike cut in, hoping to God this man would hurry so that he and Amanda could leave.

"Well then Mike, here's your rod and bait!" the man said and pulled the supplies from behind the desk and slammed them down. "That'll just be 20 bucks!"

Mike fished through his vest and handed the money to the disgusting man.

"Have a fun time!" He grinned. Mike gave a fake smile and then turned around to see Amanda running frantically out of the door.

“Wait up!” he yelled and rushed after her, wanting to leave the smell behind as much as she did.

~~~~~~

"Poochyena, use bite!" Jeff roared as Murkrow dived towards his Pokemon. Poochyena leapt aside and then onto the small black bird, locking its own jaw onto the crow's wing. Suddenly, it was knocked off by a shadow ball from Sableye.

"Poochyena!" Jeff yelled in surprise as his puppy Pokemon sprawled across the ground.

"Ha, how do you expect to win if your Pokemon don't look out for each other? I saw no effort from your Nuzleaf to save Poochyena," Candice commented. Nuzleaf glared at its trainer’s opponent, hatred swelling in its eyes.

"Nuzleaf, get that Sableye!" Jeff commanded. Nuzleaf leapt at it, but Sableye just disappeared into a puff of purple fog.

"Use scratch!" Candice yelled. Sableye reappeared behind Nuzleaf and sent its hand down the grass type’s back. Nuzleaf fell face first into the ground.

"Poochyena, stop Sableye!" Jeff followed up. Poochyena started towards it, but Murkrow wing attacked it away.

"Okay, time to take the focus off of this chick’s boobs and really concentrate!" Jeff thought to himself, bringing his eyes level with hers.

~~~~~~

"This looks like a good spot!" Mike said and sat down on the edge of a cliff overlooking a quiet stream. He cast the line out and smiled at Amanda, who had positioned herself under an oak tree. As Mike waited for the line to catch something, he and Amanda began to talk about the past.

"Remember when I was banned from your house for over a month for breaking the TV?" Mike laughed, recalling the incident. Amanda began to giggle.

"Fun times, who would've thought chucking a remote at a big screen could put a hole in it!" she responded. Suddenly, the line began to buckle and sway, signaling a catch.

"Would you like the honor?" Mike asked while handing Amanda the rod. She nodded and began to reel the line in.

To their surprise, a Magikarp flew out of the water and landed on the ground, flopping like mad.

"Oh my, what the heck is that?" Amanda screamed, dropping the line and falling back.

"Its not a good catch. Magikarp are weak!" Mike laughed. He unhooked the fish and threw it into the lake. He then cast the line out again. "Let's see what else we can snag, shall we?"

~~~~~

"Murkrow, use faint attack!" Candice yelled. The Pokemon smashed into Poochyena, but Nuzleaf was now there to tackle it away. "You're finally getting the hand of this,” Candice remarked towards Jeff. “Sableye, shadow ball!"

Sableye smiled and released another black orb. It headed straight for Poochyena, but Nuzleaf leapt in the way. It took the attack and hit the ground hard.

"Nuzleaf!" Jeff yelled. The Pokemon tried to stand, but it could not get up. Black fog still surrounded it, and after-effect of the attack.

"One down!" Candice smirked. Jeff recalled Nuzleaf, watching with anger as the red light absorbed his friend.

"The next one going down will be you, perhaps to your knees!" Jeff retorted. Candice’s mouth dropped. She was obviously appalled. Jeff had a smile on his face that hid the fact that he was now down a Pokemon.

Poochyena was a little frightened, as it now had two enemies to face.

"Poochyena, use bite!" Jeff yelled. The Pokemon rushed at Murkrow, but the bird did a spin to dive away.

~~~~~

Mike had now been fishing for almost two hours and had only managed to snag a school of Magikarp.

"Isn't there anything else in this lake?" he bellowed, tossing a rock and hearing the clunk it made as it hit the water. "Go away Magikarp!"

There was suddenly a flash of light in the lake and the surface began to ripple.

“What do you suppose that is?” Mike asked Amanda, who had leaned forward to investigate. A massive blue sea serpent rose from the lake, sending water flying in all directions.

"Gyarados!!!" Amanda screamed and instantly leapt to her feet. The Gyarados seemed angry, its large red eyes looking around for the source of its hatred. A large bump protruded from its head.

"Woops…" Mike whispered, bringing his left leg back slowly and hearing the crunch of the gravel as his foot hit the ground behind him..

Suddenly, the Pokemon let off a massive below. Amanda rushed to grab Mike just as its tail slammed against the two, sending them flying into the air, screaming the entire time.

"Now I know what Team Steam feels like!" Mike squealed beofre they landed further up the mountain.

"Ow, my head!" he heard Amanda say from a few feet away. His vision was a slightly jumbled, but it soon returned to normal. It was then that he noticed that his feet were drenched. He looked out to see Amanda was waist deep in a stream. They had been tossed from the lake and all the way into the middle of the woods!

Amanda looked for Mike, who was lying spread-eagle on the shoreline. He stood up and dusted himself off, waving to her and motioning for her to come to shore. His eyes then went wide, and he began to scream something, but she couldn't make it out.

Suddenly, a small yellow fin rose from the water in front of her. Several more appeared and she knew why Mike was yelling. A school of Carvanha, vicious fish Pokemon, was now surrounding her. She began to wade away slowly, but the Pokemon started to follow. One leapt from the water to take a bite, but she ducked.

"Hurry!" Mike yelled. She was nearing shore, but was suddenly dragged backward by her leg, finding herself in deeper water. She cried out as she was pulled underneath the water‘s surface…

~~~~~

"Murkrow get up!" Candice yelled. The Pokemon was lying on its side, unable to move. Poochyena growled triumphantly, baring its fangs in an attempt to look fierce. "Return! Now its just Poochyena and Sableye!"

"Oh really, I didn't notice!" Jeff yelled back. “Why do trainers insist on narrating battles anyway? It’s kind of dumb.”

Candice rolled her eyes. "Sableye, use faint attack!"

"You too Poochyena!" Jeff replied. Both Pokemon disappeared and reappeared on opposite sides of the field, leaving clouds of purple smoke in their wakes.

"That was pointless!" Jeff remarked. "Poochyena, bite it!"

Poochyena lunged at Sableye, but it disappeared and reappeared again, now positioned behind its opponent.

"Lick!" Candice commanded. Sableye gave an insane laugh and smiled widely; opening its mouth to reveal its long pink tongue. The tongue wrapped around Poochyena and tightened, allowing the sticky saliva to soak into the puppy’s fur. Poochyena could not move. It had been left paralyzed.

"Poochyena!" Jeff yelped with concern, his fists clenched together.

"Now use shadow ball!" Candice smiled as Sableye launched the black orb. It struck Poochyena, who yelped in pain and buckled, passing out on the court.

"Return!" Jeff said sadly, lowering his head as his Pokemon was sucked inside its orb.

"Great match!" Candice called out.

"Sure…" Jeff replied, and then walked away.

~~~~~

Mike was now deep under the water, flailing his arms to find his friend. He had leapt in as soon as Amanda disappeared under the surface. Some retarded fish were not going to take her from him.

He squinted hard, discovering that she was being pulled under by the raging Pokemon. Mike grabbed her arm and pulled, tearing Amanda from the fish Pokemon’s grips.

Amanda surfaced first, breathing heavily and coughing hard. Mike came up seconds later, kicking to push away the advancing Carvanha. He grabbed her by the shirt and swam for his life, bringing himself onto shore and laying Amanda on her back. He checked her for injuries, but she only had some minor bruises on her legs. He smiled and wiped her hair out of her face.

"You ok?" he asked with a grin.

"Yeah…" she smiled in return. For a short time, this was a very awkward moment, until Mike turned his attention to the Carvanha.

"They're perfect!" he said, pulling a Pokeball from his belt.

"You actually want one after they almost ate us?" Amanda gasped. Mike turned back.

"Of course! Go Tangela!"

He threw the Pokeball and his grass type appeared on the shoreline. It hopped up and down as Mike thought of a plan.

"Pull one in with vine whip!" he ordered. Tangela nodded and released its vines. The Carvanha dove and the Pokemon’s vines followed.

Suddenly, Tangela was being pulled forward.

"Tangela!" Mike yelled and dove after it. He caught it by the legs before it was pulled into the water. After a heavy heave, a Carvanha flew from the river, attached tightly to Tangela's vine.

"I didn't even need the rod!" Mike grinned. "Tangela, use razor leaf!"

Tangela let loose the attack, but the Carvanha let go and dodged. It landed in the water and surfaced, glaring at its attacker.

The Carvanha leapt at Tangela and used crunch, knocking Mike’s Pokemon back in a purple haze.

"Tangela, use stun spore!" Mike responded. Tangela recovered and let loose the yellow spores, striking Carvanha and paralyzing it.

The fish landed on hard ground and sat motionless.

"Now tackle it!" Mike followed up. Tangela leapt at Carvanha, but the Pokemon recovered and flopped away, using another crunch to blow it back.

"Wow, for a fish it can battle decently on land,” Mike noticed. “Tangela, razor leaf!"

Tangela released the leaf barrage, which pounded Carvanha and sent it flying backward.

"Pokeball go!" Mike shouted, tossing the ball. It struck Carvanha and pulled it inside. It shook vigorously, more than any capture Mike had tried to make as of yet. He could tell that Carvanha was trying desperately to free itself. However, it did not have the strength to succeed.

"Great job Tangela!" Mike congratulated his Pokemon as the Pokeballl stopped shaking and clicked into place. Tangela happily hopped up and down as Mike grabbed his Pokeball.

The two teenagers began to head back down the hill, Mike clutching his capture the entire way. They returned to the road and found Jeff sitting on a bench.

"What’s up Jeff?" Mike asked.

"I suck! That's what!" he replied. "I lost! Do you have something sharp that I can cut myself with to relieve the pain?”

"Jeff, you're just starting to train dark types. You can't win every match," Amanda informed him. “Besides, cutting is not a means to solve this dilemma!”

"I lost my gym match, and it took a lot out of me, but I keep trying!" Mike added in. Jeff stood up.

"That‘s because you suck more. You should kill yourself. It‘ll make us all happy!" The teen was now smiling slightly. "So what did you catch?"

"A Carvanha!" Mike grinned, trying to forget his friend‘s previous statement.

"A dark type!” the lanky teen screeched. “Give it to me!"

Mike shook his head. "This one's mine buddy. But you can do me a favor and return this fishing equipment!"

Amanda couldn’t help but laugh. After their adventure with the Carvanha, Mike had found only the remains of the fishing rod. The tackle box was MIA.

"Fine!" Jeff replied and took the broken rod from his friend.

"See you at the Pokecenter!" Mike grinned. "It’s time for my rematch!"

Jeff walked up the hill, complaining to himself the entire time. He soon came to the fishing place and instantly knew why he was sent on this errand once he walked inside. It was as if God himself had wanted to cheer Jeff up by giving him something even more pathetic to make fun of.

"Do you know what a shower is? You smell like a rotting fish!" he said to the greasy man as he handed the damaged rod back. The man gave an angry look.

"Dude, brush your teeth! Comb your hair! Go to frickin’ Target and buy some clothes!" the teen followed up. The man began to get out from the desk, flexing his enormously fat arms.

"My bad, I think you’re very pretty. What’s this? A white tank top! Oh I love it on you, it brings out the gray in your nose hair…I mean your eyes!” Jeff tried to compliment the man as a means of escape. When this didn’t work, he took the next best thing- running for his life out of the store.

Meanwhile, Team Steam continued to hang from the building from the previous day, still inside their own net.

"When do you think someone will rescue us?" Clyde asked.

"Shut up and keep gnawing!" Bonnie replied. Clyde sighed and continued to bite at the net, the sun beginning to set on them…


Next Chapter- Chapter 19: Carvanha Vs Camerupt! Cinder Town Rematch!
Mike has his rematch against the Cinder Town gym leader!

FlamingRuby
3rd May 2006, 4:42 PM
::giggles::

Jeff and Amanda are funny, as always...

Nagashi
3rd May 2006, 7:35 PM
Hehe, classic Jeff that chapter, although I must admit there were a fair few flaws - comedy was good as usual, but the overall chapter was so undescriptive I found myself skipping through parts of it, and just not getting others. I didn't know whether Amanda woke up straight after Mike stroked her hair, for example, or at noon in the next day - you didn't say which. And a bit more atmosphere description would be nice, although it might muffle the comedy aspect of this story. Keep up the good work, anyway. ^^

Sike Saner
3rd May 2006, 9:50 PM
YAY! One of my very favorite fics on SPPf is back. ^_____^

Nice, fun scenes with Jeff's battle there, and HOLY CRAP, one of his opponent's Pokémon was a freaking SABLEYE! I LOVE THOSE THINGS! ^^ It was also cool to see Mike catch that Carvanha; I like those too. ^^ And XDDD at the gross guy with the fishing equipment. XPPPP Ew...but still very funny.

Highlights:


"Although I am completely surprised that you are awake, my friend, I‘m just going to say yes to your question in hopes that you will go away," Mike retorted while rolling his eyes.

“I don’t go away. I’m like herpes,” Jeff retorted.


"Wow, what a touching moment. Let me go vomit!" Jeff yapped sarcastically.


Mike grinned. "I think I found a solution!"

He turned to the others and smiled.

"What, you going to beg Arson or suggest sexual favors?" Jeff asked.

"No, eww, just eww.” Mike responded with a look of disgust before pointing to the wall


"Can't see without my contacts, love. It looks like some fat lady with an upside down ice cream cone on her head with the words Rolenom Elsding," Jeff replied.

“Yes Jeffrey! All of us are going to go watch a fat lady with an ice cream cone on her head do Rlenom Elsding!” Amanda said sarcastically.


"Two dark Pokemon in a fight to the death!" Jeff said with happiness in his voice.

"I don't think they are killing each other-" Mike replied.

“I SAID DEATH!” Jeff cut him off.


Jeff was instantly running to the blonde female. "That was an oh-so dynamically cool match!" he said to the trainer.

“Somehow I knew that Jeff trying to use descriptive adjectives would just sound lame,” Amanda said to Mike.


"Well then, the name's Candice, and I'll be your first!" she smiled.

“Wait, my first dark battle or my first-” Jeff started to say, but Amanda smacked the back of his neck to cause the rest of his speech to slur.


"Okay, time to take the focus off of this chick’s boobs and really concentrate!" Jeff thought to himself, bringing his eyes level with hers.


"Oh really, I didn't notice!" Jeff yelled back. “Why do trainers insist on narrating battles anyway? It’s kind of dumb.”


"What’s up Jeff?" Mike asked.

"I suck! That's what!" he replied.


"Do you know what a shower is? You smell like a rotting fish!" he said to the greasy man as he handed the damaged rod back. The man gave an angry look.

"Dude, brush your teeth! Comb your hair! Go to frickin’ Target and buy some clothes!" the teen followed up. The man began to get out from the desk, flexing his enormously fat arms.

"My bad, I think you’re very pretty. What’s this? A white tank top! Oh I love it on you, it brings out the gray in your nose hair…I mean your eyes!” Jeff tried to compliment the man as a means of escape. When this didn’t work, he took the next best thing- running for his life out of the store.


So yeah, it was awesome to see more of this story and these characters, definitely. ^^ And the fact still remains...


JEFF FRICKIN' RULES!!!

Silverwing
3rd May 2006, 10:11 PM
Sike Saner: You just had to post all the highlights. Didn't you. Oh well. Its nice to see your back. I missed this fic, or maybe it was Jeff. Either way I missed it and I'm glad it's back. I liked all the classic Jeff moments (who doesn't). I wish that you had posted why you weren't posting. I thought this was dead until you posted a couple days ago. I'm glad it isn't.

DANdotW
3rd May 2006, 11:08 PM
Okay, even though I've read it before, I still wanted Carvanha to go to Jeff :P

But either way, this fic is still excellent. I'm loving your humour, and your characters.

Dan <3

Meganium
3rd May 2006, 11:52 PM
The long awaited chapter has come. It is great to see you back in action on this fic, its my personal favorite. The story of Jeff's ability to lose and not whine is truly touching. Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading.

GoldenNoctowl77
4th May 2006, 5:36 AM
Thanks all! Woah, I dropped to 4 stars :( Let's bring it back up!

P/Arts, your probably gonna' be shocked, but I couldn't agree more with you. I know this was my comeback chapter and therefor it should have been awesome, but the fact is I wanted to show you guys that I was really coming back. For this reason, I really rushed the rewrite of this chapter. I promise the next one will be back up to par though!

Wow, I didn't expect so many of my fans to return! Expect the gym battle chapter soon. It should be as descriptive as I used to be!

GoldenNoctowl77
5th May 2006, 6:13 AM
Oh looky here, it's Mike's long awaited second gym battle, completely rewritten. I think this one is up to par with my usual writing, but let me know!

Chapter 19: Carvanha Vs Camerupt! Cinder Town Rematch!

Mike was once again at the Pokemon Center of Cinder Town. The three teenagers had been in Cinder Town for almost a week now, and it was beginning to grow tiring. Mike hoped that they could get a move on today, after his rematch of course. But this would only happen if he could overcome the powerful fire Pokemon that Arson held. Just thinking about the red-haired gym leader and his cocky smirk made Mike’s blood boil.

“So, are you ready to get your *** handed to you again today? I was thinking that we could get a side of sausage with that as well,” Jeff poked fun at Mike as the two sat down at a video phone near the west wall of the Pokemon Center. Mike breathed in deep, allowing his diaphragm to fill with air, and then releasing it all through his nose as loudly as possible.

“Jeff, I’m about ready to call the Pidgeot Express Shipping Service and have you shipped back to Bayside City. Seriously, stay out of my way or I will kick your ***-”

“Hello Ms. Strateri!” Jeff cut off his friend and waved at the monitor of the phone. Mike let off a sigh, closed his eyes tightly, and then turned to the screen.

“Hi mom,” he said weakly, fiddling with his fingers underneath the desk.

“Mike, what have I told you about yelling at Jeff?” Ms. Strateri asked her son, folding her arms and waiting for a reply.

“You shouldn’t yell at Jeff because yelling at mentally retarded people is not classy,” Mike remarked with a sigh, as if he had heard this lesson a thousand times before.

“Damn right,” Jeff spoke up, not even aware that his intellect had just been insulted.

“Anyway, it’s good to hear from you sweetie! How are things up in…what town are you in now honey?” Ms. Strateri asked her son.

“We’re in Cinder Town. We’ve been here for a few days. The archipelago is really nice mom, but this place is a little too hot for my liking,” Mike explained.

“Well that’s swell. I spoke to your brother earlier. He said you actually helped him out back in Alabor City," Mike’s mother noted.

"Yeah, I did a lot of things since I started on this journey," Mike grinned. “By the way, where is Matt?”

“Oh, he’s in some tennis tournament in Luckday City. I believe its on the island North of you,” Ms. Strateri responded. "How are your friends?"

"They're fine. Amanda is taking a nap right now and Jeff is right,” Mike said while turning around, “Jeff is sleeping too.” The lanky teen was now passed out on a couch behind him.. We've had a busy week."

Why aren't you getting some rest?" His mother asked with her caring tone.

"I can't sleep because I have a big gym match today,” Mike explained.


"Oh, how many badges will that make?" his mother asked excitedly.

"Two," Mike replied with a hint of embarrassment in his voice.

"Wow!" his mother sounded a little more excited than he though she would.

"Well I have to go now mom!" Mike smiled and blew a kiss to the monitor.

"See you honey!" his mother returned the gesture and the two then hung up. Mike pushed his chair back and stood up, heading to the door behind the service desk and outside into the backyard of the Pokecenter. A small garden with benches was set up as a spot for trainers to relax. There was even a tiny pond near the south end.

Mike pulled all of his Pokeballs from his belt and tossed them down, allowing each one to explode and form into his full team of friends.

Electrike, as usual, was on a never-ending quest to capture its own tail. Aron was curled up on its back, sleeping like a baby. Combusken began to kick at the air, releasing built up energy from being in its ball for too long, Tangela was hopping up and down, and Taillow landed on Mike’s shoulder and pecked at him. Carvanha, however, just flopped into the pool and didn’t move.

"What's the matter Carvanha?" Mike asked while kneeling down at the pond’s edge. Taillow did not care that Mike was trying to play psychiatrist at the moment, as it continued to peck away.

Carvanha eyed Mike angrily, and then dove underneath the water.

"It's called Pokemon Pride Syndrome…" Mike turned to see Nurse Joy behind him, her blue eyes fixed on the pond. "Did you just catch that Carvanha?" she inquired.

"Yes, just yesterday," Mike replied and stood up to speak eye to eye with her.

"Well then, that's why your Pokemon is behaving this way. Carvanha has lost its pride. Pokemon such as Carvanha usually have tough guy attitudes, and it doesn't suit them when they are caught," Joy explained. "Carvanha will warm up to you eventually, but for now, it may be a bit of a problem."

Mike watched the fish swimming in the clear pond. "So what can I do?" he asked after turning back to Joy.

"Nothing much you can do," she answered with a shrug. "Carvanha has to accept the fact that it has been caught. Only then will it perform to your liking."

Mike was a little depressed by this. "I have a rematch against Arson today. Do you think it will help me?" he wondered.

"It's a long shot, but you could try," Joy suggested. She then smiled and headed back inside the center. Mike looked at his new Pokemon again.

"I need you Carvanha. Swallow your pride and help me today," he whispered.

~~~~~

Clyde had finally managed to gnaw through the net. The threads gave way to his teeth and a hole had formed. Bonnie shrieked for joy, and then again in fear as the two of them plummeted twenty feet to the pavement below.

"Next time, think of a plan that doesn't hurt so much!" Bonnie complained, holding her rear and neck at the same time.

"It was your plan!" Clyde replied, trying to fix his hood, which had slid in front of his face. Bonnie gave him a dirty look.

"Well, we could find the moron trainers and steal their Pokemon today, but I have a better idea." she then said.

"And that is?"

Bonnie held up a flyer that was on the ground. "We're going fishing!" she said with a grin.

~~~~~

Amanda woke up from her nap in their stay room and walked outside to join Mike.

"What's up Mike?" she inquired, sitting down on the bench next to him. Mike gave her the rundown on Carvanha, and then noticed that Jeff slipped outside to meet them.

"That's why you should give it to me!" he said with a smirk. "I have no pride!"

Mike gave him a look. "Carvanha is my only hope at winning today. I have to do something to make its pride come back,"

Carvanha rose to the surface of the pond and gave its trainer an evil stare.

"What's up buddy?" Mike asked again. Carvanha grew angrier and released a water gun to his face, then dove under the water again.

"Screw it! I can't win with this Pokemon!" Mike yelled, standing up and storming off. Carvanha surfaced to watch him go.

"Mike, wait!" Amanda pleaded and chased after her friend.

Jeff stared at Carvanha for a long time, trying to formulate what he wanted to say.

"Dude, you're not cool when you act tough!" he told it. Carvanha released another water gun, drenching the dark Pokemon trainer in the face.

"Wow, do you feel better about yourself now? That kid over there just wants to be a good trainer to you, and you have too much pride to accept him. You make me sick!" Jeff stated. Carvanha became extremely angry and dove under the water yet again.

"Screw it! You know what…I don't like you either you stupid fish!" Jeff yelled and ran off to find his friends. Carvanha rose to the surface and watched with delight as the teen tripped on his way back inside the center.

Amanda had convinced Mike to return outside. He recalled all of his Pokemon, and then checked his Pokenav.

“My match is in an hour. I don’t know why I’m even trying though. Carvanha isn’t going to help,” he said.

"You might as well risk it. What do you have to lose?" Amanda asked. Mike nodded in agreement, though he was still pouting.

"Let's go! I'm going to win with or without Carvanha." He said, knowing it was a lie.

The three teens crossed the street and walked to the gym. They passed the familiar lava fields again before opening the doors and walking into the hot room that contained the battlefield. Mike was a bit nervous as he walked around the lava pits, both from his upcoming match and the danger these pits possessed.

"Arson, I am here for a rematch!" he suddenly yelled as loud as possible, causing Amanda to hold her ears and Jeff to topple backward in surprise. The red-headed gym leader was scrubbing a portion of the battlefield and turned to see his challenger. Mike noticed that the man’s scars were extra red today.

"Well if it isn’t the little engine that couldn't! Come fore another loss?" Arson said, his ponytail swinging as he spoke.

"I come to win!" Mike retorted, his hand in a fist.

"Alright then engine, show me what you got in your caboose this time. We’ll use the same rules as last time," Arson said with a grin.

“I could think of a million things wrong with that sentence,” Jeff commented to Amanda, who tried her best to ignore him.

~~~~~

Bonnie ran screaming from the Fishing Shop, the door swinging as she made their escape. Clyde brought up the rear, hoisting all of the fishing equipment that they had just rented.

"Maybe I'll catch some deodorant to give to that man!" Bonnie shrieked and coughed up a storm. Clyde tried to respond, but his voice was muffled due to the fact that he was carrying a great many things.

"Time to snag me another water Pokemon. If I have two, we can beat those little morons!" Bonnie explained her plan as the two sat down on the shore of a lake just down the road.

"Whatever you say!" Clyde sighed. Bonnie took her pole from Clyde and let out her line into the lake. It didn’t take long before it began to tug, signaling a catch.

Bonnie pulled hard, reeling in with all her might to find a small object peak out of the water.

“What do you know. You got your wish,” Clyde remarked, a grin appearing on his face.

“Is that deodorant?” Bonnie was dumbstruck. The deodorant was covered in seaweed and drenched. Bonnie unhooked it and smirked a little.

"Well isn't that ironic?"

She then threw it aside and cast her line again.

"We'll be sure to give that to the man when we return his things," she remarked.

~~~~~

Mike was now standing on the left side of the battlefield, watching as Arson limped into place on the right side. The gym leader’s grandfather waddled out to the sidelines, preparing to ref just like last time.

"Well since you defeated Quilava last time, I guess I'll use a different Pokemon first!" Arson stated. "Go Growlithe!"

The Pokeball rolled along the charred Earth and then erupted to form a burnt orange puppy with a cream colored chest. The creature’s mouth hung open and its tongue dropped down.

"Growlithe, eh?" Mike deducted, wondering what Pokemon he should start with. "Carvanha can't take a fire Pokemon like Camerupt on land, so I have to find a way to get water on this field," he thought to himself. "Aron go!"

His own Pokeball rolled across the field and erupted into Mike’s new steel type.

"A steel type against a fire type? That’s a big no-no!" Arson explained. "Growlithe, use flamethrower!"

"Aron use dig!" Mike countered. The burning stream of flames headed towards Aron, but it dove underground at the last second. The battlefield‘s lava pools erupted as the flames went away.

"Wait for it, and then use another flamethrower!" Arson ordered. A small hump appeared in the ground as Aron sped towards Growlithe. "Now!”

Aron leapt from the earth and sped toward its opponent. Growlithe let off the flamethrower, and it connected right into Aron’s head. The Pokemon lost its momentum and flew back, but got up seconds later.

"You're forgetting that Aron is part rock type. That means fire attacks aren't as effective!" Mike explained. "Aron, use dig to create a hole in the ground!"

Aron began to dig in a circular motion, and only a few feet below the ground. After a few seconds of this, the middle of the field was a wide, empty hole.

"Now Aron, come out and use rock tomb!" Mike yelled. Aron leapt out and launched rocks at Growlithe. The boulders struck the puppy on all sides, condensing into each other and squishing the fire type within them.

"Take down!" Mike followed up. Aron ran full speed at its opponent and slammed into the puppy Pokemon, who flew backward. However, it wasn't out yet. Aron toppled back from recoil, wincing a little.

"Growlithe, use extreme speed!" Arson yelled. Growlithe raced towards Aron, an indistinguishable blur of red. This blur connected with the steel Pokemon and sent it spiraling backward.

"Aron!" Mike called out. The Pokemon stopped spinning and got up once again.

"This is a pretty even match," Amanda said. Jeff wasn‘t paying much attention.

"Aron, use rock tomb again!"

"Growlithe, extreme speed!"

Both Pokemon raced at each other. Aron launched the rocks, but Growlithe was already gone. It struck Mike’s Pokemon and sent it flying.

"Aron, use dig!" Mike countered. Aron dipped its head down and pushed into the ground as it landed, disappearing underneath the surface.

"Growlithe, use flamethrower just like before," Arson replied. Aron dove deeper than last time so that Growlithe could no longer see it coming. Before the pup knew what was happening, it was launched into the air by an emerging Aron.

"Finish it with rock tomb!" Mike ordered. Aron launched the rocks into the air, which spun around Growlithe and pulled to the middle, squeezing the dog in midair. It landed hard on the ground, the rocks shattering in the process. Growlithe could not get back up.

“One down!” Mike grinned, now confident with himself.

"Return!" Arson said with a tone of anger in his voice. "Wow, maybe you have improved, but nothing can beat Camerupt!"

He smiled as he threw the Pokeball. Camerupt formed in front of its trainer, digging its front hoof into the ground.

"Aron use dig!" Mike started round two. Aron dug under the ground again, but deep enough so that Mike couldn’t see where it was.

Suddenly, Aron was sent flying into the air in massive pain. It had dug into one of the volcano pits, which erupted and pushed the Pokemon out of the ground!

"Ha, tough luck Mike! Flamethrower!" Arson yelled, his finger pointed at Mike’s injured Pokemon. Camerupt let off the attack and it connected with Aron, whose body began to darken with the intense heat. The little Pokemon tried to stand, but just toppled over unable to battle.

"Aron return!" Mike said recalling it to its Pokeball. “You put up a tough battle, and prepared me for my next Pokemon.”

"That was cheap!" Jeff suddenly spoke up, as if the lava geysers were insulting to him.

"Hey, your friend wanted to battle in my gym, and the Pokemon League authorized the use of volcano geysers here, so technically it wasn't cheap," Arson defended himself. Jeff tried to respond, but just stuck out his tongue instead.

Mike pulled out Carvanha's Pokeball. It was a long shot, but he had no other choice.

"Carvanha go!" he tossed the Pokeball into the empty hole that Aron had dug. Carvanha appeared flopping like a fish out of water.

"How can that thing battle? There's no water here!" Arson couldn’t help but laugh.

"Right now there isn't!" Mike remarked. "Carvanha, fill Aron's hole with water!"

Carvanha flopped for a few more seconds before jumping up and launching a water gun into the hole. It then landed with a splash into the pool that formed.

"It's obeying me!" Mike grinned.

"Impressive Mike!" Arson commented.

"Ok Carvanha, now use water gun on Camerupt!" Mike commanded. Carvanha looked at him, and then dove under.

"What?" Mike was shocked.

"Looks like Carvanha just wanted a pool to swim in. It wasn't listening at all!" Amanda noticed.

Jeff was ******. "You stupid fish! I don't know why, but Mike still wants to be your trainer, so show some respect!"

"Camerupt, earthquake!" Arson demanded. With one pound of Camerupt’s hoof, the ground began to shake. Carvanha was tossed around in the water.

"That's it, I'm going to lose again," Mike winced. "I did so well, but this Carvanha just doesn't want to swallow its pride."

The water in the pool swayed back and forth uncontrollably, causing Carvanha much discomfort. It was getting angry, and the source of its anger was this camel Pokemon. Carvanha’s thoughts returned to Jeff’s statement back at the Pokemon Center. Its trainer wanted this Camerupt eliminated, and this Camerupt was angering it, so Carvanha came to the conclusion that Mike was on its side.

Carvanha emerged from the pool, its eyes fixed on Camerupt. Mike looked at the pool, bewildered by his Pokemon’s appearance.

"What are you doing?" he asked it, expecting the fish to dive again. Carvanha's face went from angry to determined, and it nodded to him.

"You want to fight?" Mike inquired excitedly. Carvanha nodded again, this time with a smirk that exposed its teeth.

"It’s about time! Ok, use water gun!" Mike commanded.

Carvanha opened its mouth allowing the jet of water to emerge. Arson was shocked as it struck Camerupt and sent it sprawling.

"What, the fish is battling?" he toppled backward and placed his hands into his thick red hair. "Camerupt, use take down!"

Camerupt got up and charged Carvanha, but the fish leapt from the water and onto the land. Camerupt fell into the pool and emerged, flailing around as it tried to swim.

"Now's my chance! Carvanha, use crunch!" Mike ordered. Carvanha flopped back to the pool and leapt up, crunching down on Camerupt and emitting a purple haze.

"Now use bite!" Mike yelled. Carvanha did as ordered, clamping onto Camerupt’s hind leg and pulling it below the water. Mike was surprised that his Pokemon showed this much strength.

"Camerupt!" Arson screamed, waiting for his Pokemon to resurface. Camerupt surfaced slowly, its volcano hump trying to spew lava, but only ejecting steam. The Pokemon looked half drowned, and Mike knew it would not be battling on.

"You did it Carvanha!" He screamed, his feet leaving the floor as he leapt into the air. Carvanha did a dolphin jump from the water, and for the first time, it smiled directly at its trainer. Mike ran to the pool and gave it high five to its fin.

"No this can't be! You cheated!" Arson was in shock.

"I‘m afraid not. If you can use those volcano geysers, than I can use water tactics," Mike responded. Arson clenched Camerupt’s Pokeball so hard that the hinge crushed. He let go in shock as the two pieces of the ball fell to the floor.

With a look of unquestionable anger, Arson approached Mike. He held out a badge shaped like a burning bush.

"Just take it. It's the Pyro badge, and I guess you've earned it," he said. Mike took the badge from the man‘s open palm.

"I told you guys I would do it,” he said while turning to his friends. Jeff and Amanda smiled.

"Thanks for losing the pride fishy!" Jeff winked at Carvanha and it winked back.

Meanwhile, by a lake in the woods, the sun was beginning to set. Bonnie cast her line out again, hoping to catch something other than the ten cans of deodorant that plagued her day.

"God, why are you punishing me?" she screeched, her hands pointed to the sky.

“It’s over Bonnie. We have to return these things,” Clyde said, taking the pole from his partner and reeling it in. He was a thief, but he would use any excuse to get Bonnie to stop her unsuccessful attempts.

The two team members returned to the Fishing Shop and walked inside. Clyde returned the equipment and Bonnie then handed the man her spoils.

"Here, you need these more then I do!" she said sadly. The man gave her a mean look as the two exited the shop. Clyde tried to cheer Bonnie up, but it was no use.

She suddenly saw Mike and co heading up the hill and brightened up.

"Oh, there they are! Let's go!" she smiled and they ran after them, as if she had been looking for them all along.

Mike placed his new badge in the badge case and closed it.

"Two down, only six to go!" he said as they headed on…

Next Chapter- Chapter 20: Reno City Lighthouse! Nuzleaf's Awesome Battle!
Mike and co make it to Reno City, where the ferry to the next island is, but Jeff gets lost at the lighthouse!

Sike Saner
5th May 2006, 8:12 AM
Nice battle! I wasn't sure if Carvanha would come through, but it did. Awesome. I liked Arson's reaction after losing, too. Hope he likes shelling out the money for a new ball for Camerupt...


“Mike, what have I told you about yelling at Jeff?” Ms. Strateri asked her son, folding her arms and waiting for a reply.

“You shouldn’t yell at Jeff because yelling at mentally retarded people is not classy,” Mike remarked with a sigh, as if he had heard this lesson a thousand times before.

“Damn right,” Jeff spoke up, not even aware that his intellect had just been insulted.

Doubly funny. XD


Electrike, as usual, was on a never-ending quest to capture its own tail.

So cute. ^^


The threads gave way to his teeth and a hole had formed. Bonnie shrieked for joy, and then again in fear as the two of them plummeted twenty feet to the pavement below.

"Next time, think of a plan that doesn't hurt so much!" Bonnie complained, holding her rear and neck at the same time.

XD


"Alright then engine, show me what you got in your caboose this time. We’ll use the same rules as last time," Arson said with a grin.

“I could think of a million things wrong with that sentence,” Jeff commented to Amanda, who tried her best to ignore him.

Thanks, Jeff; now I don’t feel so bad about getting an immediate inappropriate impression (five times fast) from that sentence. XD


"Maybe I'll catch some deodorant to give to that man!" Bonnie shrieked and coughed up a storm.

And then…


Bonnie pulled hard, reeling in with all her might to find a small object peak out of the water.

“What do you know. You got your wish,” Clyde remarked, a grin appearing on his face.

“Is that deodorant?” Bonnie was dumbstruck. The deodorant was covered in seaweed and drenched. Bonnie unhooked it and smirked a little.

Priceless. XD


"Aron use dig!" Mike started round two. Aron dug under the ground again, but deep enough so that Mike couldn’t see where it was.

Suddenly, Aron was sent flying into the air in massive pain. It had dug into one of the volcano pits, which erupted and pushed the Pokemon out of the ground!

Ouch…that’s gotta hurt.


Jeff tried to respond, but just stuck out his tongue instead.

Oh, yeah. That’s showin’ him, Jeff. XDDDD


Meanwhile, by a lake in the woods, the sun was beginning to set. Bonnie cast her line out again, hoping to catch something other than the ten cans of deodorant that plagued her day.

"God, why are you punishing me?" she screeched, her hands pointed to the sky.

…XDDDDD

Meganium
6th May 2006, 12:10 AM
You can just feel the love in the air now. I forgot about how proud Carvanah was, its a good way to develop character in the story. Jeff once again makes me crack up. Good chap keep goin.

GoldenNoctowl77
6th May 2006, 5:19 PM
Thanks for the reviews guys! CHapter 20 is already in the works. It might poossibly even be up later today. I hope some more people review this chapter though, as I would like to know if it's back up to par.

Silverwing
6th May 2006, 8:01 PM
I'll review. I think your writing is getting back up to par, but not quite there yet. Again, another funny chapter (is there one that isn't). From the first post of Search for Knowlegde, I remember the deodorant sceve very well. It's quite funny. Nothing negetive to say. Good job.

DANdotW
7th May 2006, 2:01 AM
Excellent, once again. Like Meganium said, I had forgot how proud it was. Great portrayal of the redemption. Also great showing of Arson's anger when Mike wins. So glad you brought this back. Finally I have something to read on here again :)

Hunter

Infinite Master Sceptile
7th May 2006, 4:22 AM
Wow. I just read the whole fic so far, and I'm impressed. At first, it was dull and uneven, but then it started to get interesting. And funny. What is a fanfic without humor to sustain it?
The battles just keep getting better and better. But I've noticed that now Mike has five Pokemon, and the others have only three each. And poor Bonnie and Clyde only have one each. Any plans to give them more? They really don't seem like much of a threat with only Wooper and Slugma.
I look forward to the next chapter eagerly. Consider me a new fan.

IceKing
7th May 2006, 8:59 PM
IMS, Bonnie and Clyde will get more pokemon. They prety much have the same amount of pokemon as Team Rocket

GN77, it's about damn time you updated =) I was going to review this yesterday, but halfway through I got inspired for my fic (which as you already know was inspired partially by this fic). I still consider you my idol and it was fun reading the 4 chapters I missed out on =) I'll give a short synopsis of my opinions on each. My huge reviews (but no more super nitpicky grammar =)) will return next chapter

Chapter 14: Aron's On the Beach! Cave Escapee!

It was an ok chapter, nothing too speshul. I'm very happy you decided not to go with "shiny" as a speshul trait for Aron. The whole being able to swim was an interesting twist. The professor was really 2D though 0_0, but I suppose he doesn't matter too much. I like how you use B&C in every chapter like TR, though their quickly failing schemes kinda annoy me at times.

Fave. Line:


“Well, Aron has buoyancy. Its metallic body is actually lighter than the water pressure and so it is propelled upward just as the log we are sitting on is.”

Mike and Amanda looked at the professor, but then turned immediately to the actual source of this information-Jeff! The lanky teen smiled before squinting hard and looking around as if he blacked out.

Chapter 15: Alabor City! Panic in the Harbor!

I just love it when a chapter starts out in the middle of a battle, and I can't wait before I can do it myself. One of the things I most admire you for is how your able to compress many events into one chapter, could you possibly give me some pointers? I would have had done this chapter in like 3... It's very lovely to see Mike lose once in a while, show's that he's still human! Interesting use of odor sleuth too. Interesting to see Mike's brother as well, I am strongly resisting saying something right now and you probably know what it is. I wished we could have seen their battle finish----*shuts up* Did they ever resolve the burned bridge or what? Its kinda shocking they would build a bridge outta wood. I can't imagine Wooper pulling Mike down when she doesn't even have arms...and how big is a Wailord in your opinion? I always thought of them as the size of two houses.

Fave Line:


"Well then, can I have his Pokeballs?" she said holding out her hand. At this comment, Jeff broke into hysterical laughter. He placed a hand to his mouth and turned around as if he was trying to hide this outburst from Joy. Amada rolled her eyes and grabbed the teen on the shoulder.


Chapter 16: Mike and Tropius! Field of the Grass Types!

I remember purposely skipping the chapter last time, I read it this time though. Tropius is one of my favorite pokemon now, she's just so dang kick***! And very UUed too ;__: I really loved Gregrass fields, I like grass pokemon almost as much as ice pokemon and I could really imagine this chapter as something out of the anime. Girlyshipping again in this chapter...I wonder if your going to go in the path of your friend Sceptile and have them hook up as part of a huge plot turn. I kinda felt bad for Tropius because Mike was rather mean to it, I can't say I'm too find of Mike, but hey, he's a guy and acts like a guy unlike my main charachter whose a bit of a sissy. The reoccuring joke with Jeff torturing that Tangela had me in tears, I love the sound of a screaming pokemon. God, I need to stop with the sadism... I can't help but wonder why Mike just didn't throw another pokeball at Tropius after catching Tangela, but I suppose it made a nice twist, even though I would have loved to see Tropius. By the wayz0rs, didnt tangela just jump out of nowhere in the original?

Fave Line:



“It’s probably just weed smoke from some hippie drum circle or something,” Jeff muttered back. Amanda sighed and raced up the slope to see what was occurring.



"What do you want?" he asked it. It let out a cry and Jeff tossed the stick at it, poking the creature in the eye. It shrieked and waddled away.

"Ha-ha, yeah you better run!" Jeff yelled after it through cupped hands.

Chapter 17: Cinder Town Gym! A Flaming Outcome!

This is the second badge, correctomundo? Your gyms are certainly much more challenging than mine, though I havent even gotten to my first gym... I still remember the grab one of my balls line from last version, hehe so immature yet funny... Arson is a reallly original name for a Fire Gym Leader, it actually gave me inspiration for something in my fic. Poor guy, all those burns must suck. I liked the battle, nice and descriptive and again, a good turn that Mike loses. He needs to learn to behave with his rashness. The whole pulling Electrike before he got struck by Earthquake was a tad bit cheesy though. This reminds me exactly of Ash VS Brawly!

Fave Line:


“Oh, so when a large amount of noise is heard, you automatically think I have something to do with it?” he barked. “That sounds more like a net falling at high speeds from the top of a building! How would I have anything to do with that?”

Mike peered at his friend with very confused eyes. “How the hell do you know what a net falling at high speeds from the top of a building sounds like?” he demanded to know.

“Because I used to play snag the nerd from the rooftops back home with an old fishing net my dad had. Those were grand times! The unsuspecting pale skinned, poorly groomed, smart people would try to conjure up an explanation to what they heard before being caught in a net and listening to me laugh.”


Chapter 18: The Problem Solved! Pokemon Fishing!


Catching a water pokemon to pwn a fire/ground type, niiice. This chapter was ok in terms of writing and plot, but I'm pretty sure there were lots of funny stuff in it. Heres a few:


“I don’t go away. I’m like herpes,” Jeff retorted.



"What, you going to beg Arson or suggest sexual favors?" Jeff asked.

"No, eww, just eww.” Mike responded with a look of disgust before pointing to the wall. “Look at the sign!"


“I SAID DEATH!” Jeff cut him off. Amanda rolled her eyes and made a crazy gesture with her finger.



And much much MUCH more. Jeff was at his absolute prime this chapter. Interesting to see how his non-sexual double battle paralelled to Mike and Amanda fishing. They shoulda been there to give him some support though =( I wasn't really too fond of the double battle to be honest, it was ok, but not my favorite of your battles. Carvanah is a nice pokemon for him to catch, usually the guy gets a different water pokemon in the Hoenn fics. But Carvanah has his own dangers I suppose. I wrote a very similar scene to the final scene with Jeff and the Fishing Man in my own fic with Greg and a Dirty Old Sailor, so it made me laugh seeing how you would handle a scene like that. Of course, yours>>>>>mine


Chapter 19: Carvanha Vs Camerupt! Cinder Town Rematch!

I've been reviewing for a long time and I'm a bit exhausted now <_> I think I'll quit putting effort. Mike should have trained his Carvanha more before going straight into battle, that was bit of a dumb move and I was expecting him to lose again, but his win was partially out of luck because Carvanah just wanted to get rid of Camerupt. Growlithe was not really that great of a challenge compared to Aron. Though wouldn't fire attacks still be pretty effective since the steel layer is on the outside? When you take a realistic approach of course. It was a nice strategy for Aron to dig a pool for Carvanah to swim in, a strategy that I actually once had planned for my fic >=O But I got a new one now anyway so its ok. The battles written were very lovely and you keep on improving! Never stop updating GN77! And how do you picture Crunch btw?

Fave Line:

Meanwhile, by a lake in the woods, the sun was beginning to set. Bonnie cast her line out again, hoping to catch something other than the ten cans of deodorant that plagued her day.




Ahh, its good to have you back GoldenNoctowl77. I'm pretty sure you were extremely busy with your Adminstrator duties, aye =P? If only you had continued writing till Winter, you would have glomped all in the Winter Awards (and robbed me of my comedy awards of course). I like this fic, especially its pacing. Keep up the good work!


Until then, screw you guys, I'm going to take a shower!


-IceKing

*umbreon*masta*1*1*
8th May 2006, 11:33 PM
nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooo

;rukario;;380;: oh shut up its only a fic

its not just ny fic it was 1 of the BEST fics ive read and ive read a lot of fics

;151;: oh come on ruki,lati give ruby some slack

;150;:ye mews right

;rukario;;380;:ye mew 2 u agree wiv mew on EVERYTHING

guys just SHUT UP ok ok

;rukario;;380;;151;;150;:*sticks toungs out*ne

GoldenNoctowl77
13th May 2006, 6:40 PM
Ok, here's another new chapter of SfK guys! Thanks for the reviews from the last chapter. And while you're here, I might as well tell you guys to check out my other two fics, More than a Fight and Apocalypse Rising. Both are really good and need more reviews! The links are in my signature.

Chapter 20: Reno City Lighthouse! Nuzleaf's Awesome Battle!

It had been an entire day’s walk away from Cinder Town since Mike and his friends had set out. The three teens did not miss the place at all. They had been there so long that they probably held citizenship status, seeing as how the population of it was basically zero. But with that town behind them, the group was now approaching Reno City, a port city on the south end of the island.

At this moment, Mike and Amanda had strayed away from Jeff to head into the woods. It was early morning, and that meant that it was prime time for early-bird Pokemon watching.

“Shhh,” Mike shushed Amanda as the two inched their way along the ground, careful to stay hidden in the bushes. They pulled away some foliage to find a meadow where a group of Stantler were grazing, their brown fur whistling in the morning breeze. One cradled its fawn as the rest fed on grass.

"They're so beautiful!" Amanda whispered. Mike nodded. He enjoyed moments like this. Being alone with Amanda made him feel like he was on cloud nine.

Suddenly, the Stantler group raised their heads. Something was spooking them, and the lead Pokemon called for the herd to move out. The ground rattled under their hooves as they galloped straight towards the careful observers. Mike and Amanda ducked lower as one leapt over their heads. The others began to run around them, sending bushes and dirt flying as they disappeared into the forest.

When the dust settled, Mike looked out over the meadow to see what had spooked the herd so bad. Jeff was rushing toward them, his arms flailing and a big smile on his face. He looked like a small child chasing a butterfly.

"Hey guys, did you see the Stantler?" he asked with excitement in his cracking voice. Amanda got up, preparing to snuff the child, but Mike grabbed her ankle and shook his head. She sighed and decided to let the incident go.

Mike got up and grabbed his backpack from the tree where he had left it to go view the Pokemon.

"Yeah I saw them Jeff, and we were actually watching them before you scared them all away," he finally answered Jeff, who was sitting at the edge of the forest panting heavily and waiting for their response.

"I know, wasn't it funny?" Jeff laughed. “They all ran like pansies!”

Mike rolled his eyes. "How far are we from Reno City?" he asked Amanda, trying to stop giving Jeff attention. Amanda pulled out her Pokenav and flipped a switch.

"Not that far, maybe a half hour," said with a smile.

"Well then let's get going," Mike replied, hoisting his pack onto his shoulder and walking forward.

~~~~~

Bonnie and Clyde were now dragging themselves along a barren road in hopes of picking up the three teens’ trail again.

"God hates me. That's all there is too it!" Bonnie whined, holding the ends of her hair and crying at the split ends.

"No he doesn't Bonnie. He's just busy!" Clyde tried to console her. She had been complaining the whole way and he was getting kind of tired of it.

"I need a break!" his friend blurted out suddenly, falling to a sitting position right in the middle of the road. Clyde sighed. He needed one too, but wasn't about to speak up. Bonnie pulled herself forward towards a tree at the side of the road in order to lean against it. When she was firmly up against it, she began to pull her head forward and send it flying back, smashing the back of her head into the bark.

"What have I done with my life to deserve this?" she wailed as continued her self-punishment. A small quack rang out at her latest smash and a Pokemon came tumbling out of the tree, landing head first on top of Bonnie.

"Ow!" she wailed as her eyes rolled around in their sockets. Clyde turned to see what happened, and noticed that it seemed as if Bonnie was wearing a green sombrero, except part of this hat was flailing uncontrollably.

Bonnie got up and the Pokemon toppled down to the road.

"What the heck is that thing?" the Team Aqua grunt shrieked. The Pokemon stood up on its hind legs and peered at Bonnie with big white eyes. Its hands were clawed and it had a wide orange beak. It’s most noticeable attribute, however, was a broad lily pad on its head.

"I'm no expert, but I believe it's a serving platter," Clyde replied. The Pokemon cocked its head and let out a low quack.

"Silly Clyde, serving platters don’t quack. This thing must be a Pokemon!“ Bonnie stated, staring the creature down.

“Oh my Pokeballs! It’s a Lombre!” a young trainer came running up the road, his yellow t-shirt blowing in the breeze and his beady eyes fixed on the Pokemon before Bonnie. “A water type will complete my collection!”

“A water type? A water type did you say?” Bonnie asked the boy, who was pulling out a Pokeball to prepare to capture the Lombre.

“Yes ma’am! Now could you please move to the left a bit so I have room to capture it,” the boy asked politely.

Bonnie did as ordered, but would not take this so lightly. She wanted this new water Pokemon to herself, and some greasy-haired little boy was going to ruin her chances. She looked down at the ground and found a rock, its shape perfect for taking out unwanted visitors.

As she picked the item from the ground, she noticed Clyde mouthing the word “no” to her and folding his hands into a pleading position. She completely ignored her partner and chucked the rock as hard as she could.

“Pokeball, g-” the boy began before the rock collided with his stomach. He fell to the ground, gasping for air as the rock and Pokeball rolled to his side.

“Ow, what was that for?” he whispered. The wind was obviously knocked out of him.

“Damnit, he’s still alive,” Bonnie thought to herself. Without being able to find a single thing to rectify this, she pulled her backpack from her shoulder and walked over to the fallen kid. She began to beat him uncontrollably in the head with it.

“Bonnie stop it!” Clyde roared.

“Leave me alone, please!” the boy pleaded through each beating.

“Why isn’t this working?” Bonnie wondered as the boy did not seem affected by the hits he was receiving.

“Your pack is empty!” Clyde sighed. Bonnie stopped and walked away from the fallen kid.

“That will teach you to try and steal my Pokemon,” she said over her shoulder. The Lombre had since grown bored of the situation and was waddling back to the tree it had come from.

"Heaven sent me a water Pokemon from the sky! I think God is starting to like me!" Bonnie commented. With that she pulled a Pokeball from her belt. "Go Wooper!"

Her small blue Pokemon popped out of the ball and formed in front of Lombre, cutting off its escape.

"Wooper, use water gun!" Bonnie commanded. Wooper let loose the stream of water, but Lombre just sat there as if it was nothing. Water collected in its lily pad and the Pokemon seemed to look healthier because of it.

"Bonnie, if I may inform you of something-" Clyde began before being cut off.

"No!" she interrupted. Suddenly, Lombre let out another quack and a green ball of energy exited it. It struck Wooper, cascading the Pokemon in green and then retreating back to Lombre. Wooper fell down, all of its energy lost to its foe.

"But…how?" Bonnie stuttered.

"I wanted to tell you earlier! Lombre is part grass type!" Clyde cut in.

"Thanks for telling me you nitwit!" Bonnie barked.

“I’m still lying here, and my nose is starting to bleed,” the boy chirped up.

“Quiet you!” Bonnie interjected. Lombre turned and began to leave.

"Well, better luck next time," Clyde informed his companion.

"Oh no, it's not going anywhere!" Bonnie said with an evil grin. She suddenly lunged at the Lombre and tackled it to the ground. The Pokemon let out a shocked quack and toppled over, sending dust flying everywhere. Bonnie then pulled the Pokemon up by the neck.

"You're mine, quackers!" she smiled. Lombre struggled to free itself, but her grip was tight. Bonnie let out a possessed roar and then tossed the duck Pokemon, sending it careening into the tree. Lombre fell down, completely and utterly dazed from the hit. Bonnie pulled a blue and white Pokeball from her belt and pressed the switch to make it grow.

"Lure ball go!" she ordered while throwing the ball. It struck Lombre and sucked it inside. The ball shook for quite some time, and then finally stopped.

"Yay!" Bonnie said while picking it up.

"Wow, you actually did it," Clyde said shocked.

“I’m still hurting here,” the boy said.

“Shut up boy! You’re ruining my moment of glory!” Bonnie shushed him.

~~~~~

Mike and co had now arrived in Reno City. The place was basically a street of shops on one side of the road, and a port and a beach on the other. A tall white lighthouse sat at the edge of the city, signaling to travelers that they had arrived.

Mike and his friends had decided to have a nice rest on the beach before they left for the next island.

"The ferry leaves in an hour," Amanda reminded them while sitting down on a blanket that she had spread out on the sand.

"Why don't we go for a dip in the ocean?" Mike asked. Amanda gave a girlish smile and agreed. She grabbed her backpack and stood up, walking over to the restroom building to change.

Minutes later she emerged in a two piece bikini, shaking her head to allow her brown hair to flow to her sides as she walked back to her friends.

"Uh-" Mike was in shock as he tried to find the words. This seemed to happen every time they swam.

"Yoo-hoo, Mike?" Jeff waved, trying to get his attention. “Do I have to strut my stuff in a bikini to get noticed around here? I’ll do it you know!”

Amanda smiled to herself. She knew Mike was staring at her, but tried not to show it.

"Oh right, swimming!" Mike finally said. He pulled off his shirt and set it down on the sand. He then stood up and went into the men's room. Jeff tagged along. Inside, Mike went into one stall while Jeff went in the other.

"Finally, a real restroom!" Mike laughed while slipping off his shorts and pulling his bathing trunks from his pack.

"I saw you looking at her," Jeff snarled.

"What? You're crazy," Mike replied.

"Don't play dumb buddy,! You like her. I may be a complete nitwit, but I have been sure on this for awhile," Jeff remarked. He tried to pull his trunks on, but because of his height and the cramped space of the stall, he was having trouble. He toppled to the side, banging his head against the wall.

"Jeff, I really don't feel like talking about this while I'm pissing," Mike replied, starting to relieve himself to try and change the subject.

"Fine, whatever, but I can tell," Jeff stated before falling backward onto the toilet. Mike opened the stall, washed his hands, and left without another word. Jeff opened the door, his head throbbing and his trunks only halfway up.

"About time!" Amanda smiled as Mike came out. Mike smiled back, hoping Amanda was eying him the same way he did her. He could never tell with women.

"How 'bout that dip now?" he asked, folding his arms over his abs and letting off a smirk. Amanda got up and the two raced each other to the water, diving in and beginning to swim outward.

Jeff waddled out of the stall, his suit finally in place.

"Have fun guys!" Jeff said while releasing each one of his Pokemon onto the beach.

“Hey Jeff, let our Pokemon out too, ok?” Mike asked from the water. Jeff sighed and pulled his friends’ Pokeballs out of their packs. He then tossed them to the ground. Electrike ran along the beach, following its own footprints in the sand. Combusken sat down next to Aron, and they began to sleep. Taillow flew out over the water to try and peck Mike, but he dove under to evade it. It became annoyed and just flew around. Carvanha swam next to Mike and Tangela hopped on shore.

"You like the water Carvanha?" Mike asked. The Pokemon nodded and dove under. Mudkip buried itself in the muddy sand. It then began to fling it around, hitting Nuzleaf in the cheek. Nuzleaf backed away and folded its arms.

"Loosen up Nuzleaf! Have some fun!" Jeff grinned. Nuzleaf sat down and began to make a sand castle, eying Jeff in hopes that he was satisfied.

After swimming for a half hour, Mike and Amanda came to shore again. "That was fun!" Mike laughed.

"Sure was!" Amanda replied. Mike looked at her as she pulled back her wet hair. She was gorgeous, even when wet.

Suddenly, Jeff walked in the way of his view. Mike toppled backward, surprised that the gorgeous woman had turned into a tall, pale, and lanky man.

"You're doing it again!" Jeff remarked.

"Jeff, for the last time go away! Leave me alone! You've annoyed me all day!" Mike yelled. At this, Jeff folded his arms and backed away.

"I didn't mean it," Mike let out.

"That's fine, you want me gone, I'm out of here!" Jeff said angrily. He picked up his clothes and walked off the beach. Nuzleaf, Treecko, and Poochyena followed him.

"I didn't mean it," Mike said looking at Amanda.

"Just let him cool off," Amanda replied.

Jeff put his clothes back on in a bait shop bathroom and then entered the city again. "Just trying to state the obvious and he blows up on me!" he yelled to no one in particular. As he walked along the road, he was not aware that he was being watched.

"Oh look, its one of those morons now!" Bonnie grinned from the tree line. "Time to see how good my new Pokemon is!"

Jeff continued to walk down the road, trying his best to get as far away from the beach as humanly possible. He began to kick a small pebble as he went. Nuzleaf walked to the side of him.

"At least you don't yell!" Jeff said while looking at it. Nuzleaf let off a small grin and opened its mouth to disprove its trainer, but Jeff kicked it in the shin before it could yell.

"My Pokemon are better friends then my human ones," He then said as Nuzleaf hopped on one foot and held its injured leg. Treecko and Poochyena leapt up onto their trainer’s shoulders. Jeff then noticed that he was coming upon the Reno City lighthouse.

"Wow, that's big!" he said looking up at it. The light at the top was spinning, illuminating the ocean as the sun began to set.

"Let's check it out!" Jeff suggested to his Pokemon and walked towards the entrance. Team Steam exited the bushes and followed their foe into the building.

~~~~~

"Jeff's been gone a while," Mike said looking up at the cityscape.

"He's been gone for thirty minutes," Amanda cut in, confused at Mike’s statement.

"That's a long time for Jeff," Mike explained. "We better go look for him."

Amanda stared at Mike for a few seconds, and then nodded. The two recalled their Pokemon and returned to the bathrooms to change.

"Who knows what trouble Jeff can get into alone," Mike stated as they walked up the beach.

~~~~~

Jeff had walked up several flights of stairs and was now on the fourth floor of the lighthouse. A window was open on this floor, and it was rattling as a cool breeze blew in. The walls were damp from the ocean humidity.

"It's hard to see in here. This lighthouse is too bright!" Jeff said to his Pokemon. "I want to see the top of it!"

As Jeff continued to the top, Team Steam came up the stairs behind him.

"Why the hell is he going to the top?" Clyde said while out of breath.

"Who cares, it'll be easier to snatch his Pokemon if he can't escape!" Bonnie said with a grin.

~~~~~

Mike and Amanda searched high and low, but Jeff was nowhere to be found. Mike exited the local Burger King as Amanda searched the adult toy store.

"Nothing!" she said with a little bit of uneasiness in her voice, as if the place had spooked her. "But there was some gross things that Jeff would have found amusing!"

Mike saw an old woman walking down the road while lugging a cart of apples.

"Hello miss!" he greeted her while grabbing the cart. He positioned it on the sidewalk and woman thanked him. "Have you seen a tall gimpy teenager around here?" Mike then asked. The old woman smiled.

"Yes, he was heading toward the lighthouse I do believe!" she answered.

"Thanks!" Mike replied. He then grabbed Amanda and headed off. The old woman waited until they were gone, then looked around to see if anyone was watching her. She then placed a bottle rocket into the cart of apples, lit it, and ran laughing into the night as the cart exploded into apple goodness.

~~~~~

Jeff was now staring into the rotating light at the top of the lighthouse.

"So this is what it's like!" he smiled as his eyes began to hurt. Suddenly, Bonnie and Clyde appeared at the top of the stairs.

"Water gun! Flamethrower!" they yelled in unison. Slugma and Wooper launched the attacks, sending Poochyena and Treecko flying from Jeff's shoulders. They hit the ground hard and Jeff recalled them.

"What do you guys want?" Jeff asked, hoping he wouldn’t have to avenge his injured Pokemon and that this was all a misunderstanding. He didn’t feel like doing work tonight.

"Why, your Pokemon of course!" Bonnie smirked.

"Yeah, we don’t have any ulterior motives!" Clyde remarked. Bonnie gave him a look and an elbow to the gut.

"Gosh darn it. I just wanted a peaceful night! You won't get them!" Jeff yelled back.

"Oh, yes we will!" Bonnie replied throwing a Pokeball. Lombre formed on the hard metal floor.

"A Lombre? Since when?" Jeff asked.

"No questions boy, just hand over the Pokemon!" Bonnie replied.

"Nuzleaf go!" Jeff yelled. Nuzleaf stepped in front of its trainer.

"Wow, your pathetic Pinocchio wants to fight does it?" Bonnie laughed. "Lombre use fury swipes!"

Lombre raced at Nuzleaf with its claws wide. It smashed itself into the long-nosed Pokemon and began to swipe away.

"Nuzleaf, get out of there!" Jeff yelled. Nuzleaf was being battered and it couldn't move. Its body was beginning to scar.

"Now use fake out!" Bonnie commanded. Lombre stopped hitting Nuzleaf and folded its arms. It began to whistle and walk away. Nuzleaf took this time to try and recover energy by kneeling, but Lombre then unexpectedly shot forward and smashed its arm into it. Nuzleaf flew into the air and hit the wall hard, causing the concrete to crack.

"Nuzleaf!" Jeff yelled. Nuzleaf fell to the floor and weakly got up. "You can do this Nuzleaf, don't let some quack and her Pokemon beat you!"

"I resent that!" Bonnie replied.

Nuzleaf lunged itself as Lombre and smashed into it. Lombre bounced back, confused at its opponent’s newfound strength.

"Great Nuzleaf, now use razor leaf!" Nuzleaf opened its palms and allowed the sharp leaves to sail out, much like a magician would do with a deck of cards.

"Use your razor leaf too!" Bonnie commanded. Lombre shook its lily pad until its own set of leaves flung themselves outward. The leaves struck each other and fell helplessly to the ground, each one shredded.

"I’m not in the mood for salad! Faint attack!" Jeff said stupidly. Nuzleaf disappeared and reappeared behind Lombre. It smashed into it and sent it flying enveloped in black energy.

"Now razor leaf!" Jeff commanded. Nuzleaf launched the attack and the leaves sliced into Lombre, wounding its wet body. When it hit the ground, it was unable to get up.

"No! Get up you stupid duck!" Bonnie roared. When she noticed the Pokemon’s eyes were shaped like X’s, she angrily recalled it.

"Guess you have to leave me alone now!" Jeff smirked.

"Not on your life!" Bonnie yelled. "Slugma, Wooper tackle him!"

The Pokemon pushed themselves into Jeff and he sailed towards the wall. However, he didn’t hit concrete. Jeff felt his back smack against the cold glass, which shattered and sent him careening out of the top of the lighthouse. He was now free falling to the ground below.

"This is it!" he said to himself and closed his eyes as the ground got closer.

Suddenly, he wasn't falling as fast.

"Great, now bring him down slowly!" Mike yelled. Taillow carefully flew down with its talons gripping Jeff's shirt. It let him go easily on the ground and Mike and Amanda approached him.

"Guess I owe you one!" Jeff replied as Mike helped him to his feet.

"We're even buddy!" Mike grinned.

Bonnie looked out over the broken glass.

"He didn't go splat!" she wailed in disbelief. "We could've taken his Pokemon when he was dead!"

"But we almost killed him! That’s the second time you tried to commit homicide today! That boy is probably still lying there injured on the road!” Clyde stammered.

Suddenly, the familiar sirens of Officer Jenny's police car filled the air.

"To the submarine!" Bonnie yelled.

“Since when did we have a submarine?” Clyde asked.

“Since we made it to Reno City! Archie made sure that we could follow these morons when they leave. He sent it,” Bonnie explained.

“Fair enough,” Clyde replied. The two ran off down the stairs.

Mike and his friends could not stay for the police report. The ferry was leaving in ten minutes and so they had to rush to catch it. They reached the harbor just as the ferry was ready to depart. With a quick ticket flash, they boarded.

Jeff released Nuzleaf as soon as they settled in. "Great job today, you made me proud," he congratulated it. Nuzleaf smiled back as the ferry pulled out of the harbor…

Next Chapter- Chapter 21: Mastering Brick Break! Combusken's Special Training!
Mike prepares Combusken for his 3rd gym fight against the barrier crazy normal gym leader Penny.

Silverwing
13th May 2006, 9:42 PM
“Damnit, he’s still alive,” Bonnie thought to herself. Without being able to find a single thing to rectify this, she pulled her backpack from her shoulder and walked over to the fallen kid. She began to beat him uncontrollably in the head with it.

“Bonnie stop it!” Clyde roared.

“Leave me alone, please!” the boy pleaded through each beating.

“Why isn’t this working?” Bonnie wondered as the boy did not seem affected by the hits he was receiving.


Genius, pure genuis. Nice job, I like the exploding apples. There was also a bit of mature humor in this one, which I liked. Good job.

Sike Saner
14th May 2006, 4:43 AM
"Hey guys, did you see the Stantler?" he asked with excitement in his cracking voice. Amanda got up, preparing to snuff the child, but Mike grabbed her ankle and shook his head. She sighed and decided to let the incident go.

Mike got up and grabbed his backpack from the tree where he had left it to go view the Pokemon.

"Yeah I saw them Jeff, and we were actually watching them before you scared them all away," he finally answered Jeff, who was sitting at the edge of the forest panting heavily and waiting for their response.

"I know, wasn't it funny?" Jeff laughed. “They all ran like pansies!”

XDDDD Ah, good ol’ Jeff. Even when he does things that make you want to throw a shoe at him, he’s just so very easy to like. ^^


"What the heck is that thing?" the Team Aqua grunt shrieked. The Pokemon stood up on its hind legs and peered at Bonnie with big white eyes. Its hands were clawed and it had a wide orange beak. It’s most noticeable attribute, however, was a broad lily pad on its head.

"I'm no expert, but I believe it's a serving platter," Clyde replied. The Pokemon cocked its head and let out a low quack.

"Silly Clyde, serving platters don’t quack. This thing must be a Pokemon!“ Bonnie stated, staring the creature down.

“Serving platters don’t quack”…XDDDD


“Damnit, he’s still alive,” Bonnie thought to herself. Without being able to find a single thing to rectify this, she pulled her backpack from her shoulder and walked over to the fallen kid. She began to beat him uncontrollably in the head with it.

LMRCAO! Violence… <3


“Why isn’t this working?” Bonnie wondered as the boy did not seem affected by the hits he was receiving.

“Your pack is empty!” Clyde sighed. Bonnie stopped and walked away from the fallen kid.

…wow. XDDDD


“I’m still lying here, and my nose is starting to bleed,” the boy chirped up.

…Okay, why did I laugh at that? Am I really just that evil? XP


"Yoo-hoo, Mike?" Jeff waved, trying to get his attention. “Do I have to strut my stuff in a bikini to get noticed around here? I’ll do it you know!”

Oh, there’s a lovely image… XD


The old woman waited until they were gone, then looked around to see if anyone was watching her. She then placed a bottle rocket into the cart of apples, lit it, and ran laughing into the night as the cart exploded into apple goodness.

Wtf? XDDDDDDDD


"He didn't go splat!"

I love that line. XD



I'm glad that Bonnie got a Lombre. I love those things, almost as much as I love Ludicolo. Hooray for serving pla-I mean, lily-pad-duck-thing-Pokémon. ^^

IceKing
14th May 2006, 8:01 PM
Hello Bob! What a nice way to spend a rainy sunday afternoon, reviewing this fic and listening to the Mulan soundtrack on an eternal loop!

Here I go!


“Oh my Pokeballs! It’s a Lombre!” a young trainer came running up the road, his yellow t-shirt blowing in the breeze and his beady eyes fixed on the Pokemon before Bonnie. “A water type will complete my collection!”

OH YEAH! Heheheh


Bonnie did as ordered, but would not take this so lightly. She wanted this new water Pokemon to herself, and some greasy-haired little boy was going to ruin her chances. She looked down at the ground and found a rock, its shape perfect for taking out unwanted visitors.


Oh my Shiva...what is wrong with her XD


“Damnit, he’s still alive,” Bonnie thought to herself.

Ahh, good old Sadistic humor XD


“I’m still lying here, and my nose is starting to bleed,” the boy chirped up.

“Quiet you!” Bonnie interjected. Lombre turned and began to leave.

Awww, poor kid. But they have to catch the Lombre of course!


Minutes later she emerged in a two piece bikini, shaking her head to allow her brown hair to flow to her sides as she walked back to her friends.

"Uh-" Mike was in shock as he tried to find the words. This seemed to happen every time they swam.


Someone is in wub...



"I saw you looking at her," Jeff snarled.

"What? You're crazy," Mike replied.

"Don't play dumb buddy,! You like her. I may be a complete nitwit, but I have been sure on this for awhile," Jeff remarked. He tried to pull his trunks on, but because of his height and the cramped space of the stall, he was having trouble. He toppled to the side, banging his head against the wall.

Heh, bout time someone noticed! I wonder if Amanda noticed too. It's quite obvious. I mean, as soon as they had a trio consisting of one girl and two boys, it should be quite obvious that the main charachter boy will fall in love with the girl =P


She was gorgeous, even when wet.

Errm, maybe its just me, but dont girls get even MORE gorgeous when wet?


"You're doing it again!" Jeff remarked.

"Jeff, for the last time go away! Leave me alone! You've annoyed me all day!" Mike yelled. At this, Jeff folded his arms and backed away.

"I didn't mean it," Mike let out.

"That's fine, you want me gone, I'm out of here!" Jeff said angrily. He picked up his clothes and walked off the beach. Nuzleaf, Treecko, and Poochyena followed him.

I still remember this scene and how it shocked me. *shakes head* Fighting over a woman...how typical. THey should just go for each other, things will just be sooo much less dramatic! Go Girlytardshipping! I'm surprised that they don't fight more quite honestly



"Who knows what trouble Jeff can get into alone," Mike stated as they walked up the beach.


Very true


"Thanks!" Mike replied. He then grabbed Amanda and headed off. The old woman waited until they were gone, then looked around to see if anyone was watching her. She then placed a bottle rocket into the cart of apples, lit it, and ran laughing into the night as the cart exploded into apple goodness.

...WHAT...THE...HELL XDDDDDD

Wow, it's completely random yet relevant stuff like that that makes me laugh so hard XD


"Yeah, we don’t have any ulterior motives!" Clyde remarked. Bonnie gave him a look and an elbow to the gut.

Hah, ulterior motives....


"Now use fake out!" Bonnie commanded. Lombre stopped hitting Nuzleaf and folded its arms. It began to whistle and walk away. Nuzleaf took this time to try and recover energy by kneeling, but Lombre then unexpectedly shot forward and smashed its arm into it. Nuzleaf flew into the air and hit the wall hard, causing the concrete to crack.

Great description of Fake Out, personally liked the whistling part.



"Nuzleaf!" Jeff yelled. Nuzleaf fell to the floor and weakly got up. "You can do this Nuzleaf, don't let some quack and her Pokemon beat you!"

"I resent that!" Bonnie replied.

HAH! Delayed reaction jokes, I LOVE those with a great passion! It takes great skill to pull them off. Or I'm just really slow...


The Pokemon pushed themselves into Jeff and he sailed towards the wall. However, he didn’t hit concrete. Jeff felt his back smack against the cold glass, which shattered and sent him careening out of the top of the lighthouse. He was now free falling to the ground below.


Oh snap...I'm going to go ahead and guess Mike saves him XD


"This is it!" he said to himself and closed his eyes as the ground got closer.

I wasnt too fond of that line...it really didn't portray his fear well in my opinion


"To the submarine!" Bonnie yelled.

“Since when did we have a submarine?” Clyde asked.

“Since we made it to Reno City! Archie made sure that we could follow these morons when they leave. He sent it,” Bonnie explained.

“Fair enough,” Clyde replied. The two ran off down the stairs.

TO THE SUBMARINE! It better not bea Magikarp one =P!





Nice chapter, I got the wrong impression of Reno City because I was thinking Nevada/Las Vegas. Instead this city seems to be small. I particularly loved the scene with Bonnie knockign that kid over and everyone ignoring him as he was injured. Good callback at the end too. So they just decided to go to the beach and thats pretty much it for Reno City? No PokeCenter or PokeMart? Ah well, nice charachterizations during the beach scene, especialy with the Mike-Jeff tension. Though I think you should have somehow completed the tension if you started it, then again maybe the saving Jeff scene was more subtle since they arent going to go all effusive with their feelings =P Cant wait till that Lombre you-know-whats


Till then, screw you guys, I'm going to write!

-IceKing

GoldenNoctowl77
17th May 2006, 5:04 PM
Hey guys! Thanks for the reviews. Just to let you all know, Chapter 21 is in the works. It is almost done and will be posted shortly.

Until then, head on over to my other fics. They are lonely and in need of stimulation!

GoldenNoctowl77
24th May 2006, 6:09 AM
Sorry for the lack of updates. My wireless network at home has been done since Friday and I can't seem to fix it. So it might take some time before a new chap is posted!

DANdotW
28th June 2006, 12:19 PM
Oooh, I hope this doesn't go away again :( I really liked this story. It's nice when you see something that's actaully worth reading nowadays.

Hunter

GoldenNoctowl77
28th June 2006, 2:28 PM
Yep, It'll be back. I was actually going to make an announcement yesterday, but never got around to it. I should be writing a remake chapter or two tonight :)

FlamingRuby
28th June 2006, 2:30 PM
I was worried this would die again...

FusionSonicX
28th June 2006, 8:36 PM
Yay! Haha!

DANdotW
29th June 2006, 12:40 PM
I'm glad. If I had missed the return of the pinapple I may have died. And to be fair, the pinapple is about all I remember about the rest of it :( I really am looking forward to finding out what will happen to everyone.

Hunter

GoldenNoctowl77
27th March 2007, 6:29 PM
Well, I am here to let anyone that is still alive that read my fic, (and newcomers I might add) that Search for Knowledge is going to continue. I know, I know, almost a year hiatus. Meh, my life got completely screwed up within a matter of weeks and I was being moved around while trying to deal with college, life, and work. I will give all of you time to catch up before I post a new chapter. For easy access, all the chapters are linked on the first page! Please come back to me!!!!

Silverwing
27th March 2007, 9:33 PM
WOO HOO!!! He's back. Well, if my memory serves me right, this will be the third try at finishing this fanfic. Third times a charm. Great thing your back too, this is my favorite fanfic.

Meganium
28th March 2007, 6:07 PM
Alright, its going to be great to get my daily dose of Jeff again. Thanks for bringing my favorite fic back again.