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♥Princess Ketchum♥
2nd September 2005, 2:42 PM
The Story of Three Friends,One True Love

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This Fanfic is about Three best friends,but the two traniers Ash and Alex like Emily,but who does Emily love Ash or Alex,find out soon

Characters
Mudkip girl- Emily
-Absol- - Alex
Ash ketchum

Chapter 1

One day Pokemon Trainer Emily was travelling with her buddy Pikachu and her best friend Alex,
Emily had just won the Johto league, and she and Alex (I'm a boy) were leaning on the side bar of a cruiser.

Emily had been given 2 tickets for winning the Johto League, so she decided to go to Hoenn to get 8 more badges, and a few new pokemon.
She'd never met any Hoenn pokemon, and was really excited at the thought of meeting so many new pokemon.

'I can't wait!' she told Alex, after Alex was speaking a Trainer named Ash Ketchum, came over to say hello, to them.

'Hello' Ash said

Then He said hello to Emily, She start blushing

'I'm Ash Ketchum, from Pallet Town' He said

'I'm-I'm from there too!' Emily said, trying to control her blushing and shyness because Ash was there

I Am Alex from pallet town too

I am going to Hoenn region to get my first pokemon

Because I have been helping Emily with her on her journey, so I am getting my first pokemon there instead

Awesome XD and so When did u start then Emily is this your first time said Ash
I started the same day as you said Emily

'Wait a second; I got the last starter pokemon. Which one did you get?' Ash Asked
'A Pikachu' Emily replied

Ash was confused *_* how she got a pikachu too?

Well after you left Prof.Oak had another spare one,A girl pikachu so it give it to me said Emily

Cool so This girl pikachu is related to mine? said Ash

Yeah Prof.Oak said they used to be pairs XD Said Emily

Oh i did not know that 0_o said Ash

Anyway Alex what u gonna pick as your first hoeen starter said Ash

well i might pick a fire type there my fav XD, Said Alex Excited

Cool,a fire choice is a good starter to choose,said Ash XD

Then suddenly the Caption Said to Everyone,
We are now arriving At the port in Littleroot town

Awsome said together by Emily,Ash and Alex

I am so exctied so Ash and Alex XD

Emily said it in her own Style 'All right' we reach Hoeen shouted Emily

then Ash said to Emily & Alex asked if they wanted to travel with him

Ok it will be awsome said Alex shaking Ash's Hand

'Yes' said Emily but could not help blushing when he looked at her

Finally when they reach The Harbour, they started walking,
but then Ash noticed something wrong His Pikachu was Coming up with a fever,

Emily & Alex come here quick,Shouted Ash panicing

Oh no we need to get pikachu to the Pokemon Center! said Emily

But there is no pokemon center here in littleroot town cried Alex

Ok we have to ring Prof.Birch and we go now said Emily

Thanks said Ash

Emily started blushing as she went to start running to the phone

She is a awsome friend said Ash and Alex

Pikachu please be ok buddy! cried Ash

What will happen to Pikachu,will Prof.birch get there in time to help pikachu

So Find out in Part Two soon!

<.::<*~Minano~*>::.>
2nd September 2005, 3:12 PM
-_-;;; Its useless for you to even write a fanfic...


'I can't wait!' she told Alex, after Alex was speaking a Trainer named Ash Ketchum, came over to say hello, to them.

It should be:

"I can't wait!" Emily told Alex, and out of the blue, a voise was heard.

And how do we know That is Ash?


I'm Ash Ketchum, from Pallet Town' He said

WHERE'S the "s? And fullstop? I wonder how long can your mouth say...

That is not really good, but grammar is bad.

EDIT: SHOULD BE IN SHIPPING FORUM...

--C4--
2nd September 2005, 3:14 PM
Wow great fanfic the idea of them both having a pikachu who were partners is a good idea, it could make them get together as a couple.

Also the idea of the fever was a good idea plus Ash panicing because he has a great bond with Pikachu of course.
Nice banner too
8/10.

<.::<*~Minano~*>::.>
2nd September 2005, 3:17 PM
Um, although the storyline is good, but *sees top post*

~Minano

♥Princess Ketchum♥
2nd September 2005, 3:24 PM
thanks you guys,its my first one XD,-Absol- helped me with some of it cause both of us are writing the chapters each

Akane
2nd September 2005, 4:18 PM
Awww...that is a nice start. ^^ I enjoyed reading it, I can't wait for more.

♥Princess Ketchum♥
2nd September 2005, 4:20 PM
thanks,me and -absol- will write more soon

Kirsty_
2nd September 2005, 4:22 PM
Hey :D

Cool Fanfic! Might of known Ash would be in it ;)

I rate it 8/10, can't wait to read the second part!

skiboydoggy
2nd September 2005, 4:27 PM
...
Work on spelling, do not use short forms such as 'u'.
DO NOT USE SMILIES! (XD)

Wow, another Pikachu.
Wow, another Pallet Trainer wins the Johto League. When she gets her Pikachu about five seconds after Ash does.

Wow.

♥Princess Ketchum♥
2nd September 2005, 4:29 PM
yeah Awsome huh XD,Part 2 will be more exiciting XD

<.::<*~Minano~*>::.>
2nd September 2005, 4:46 PM
...
Work on spelling, do not use short forms such as 'u'.
DO NOT USE SMILIES! (XD)

Wow, another Pikachu.
Wow, another Pallet Trainer wins the Johto League. When she gets her Pikachu about five seconds after Ash does.

Wow.

True, this fanfic needs MORE HELPPP...

~Minano

♥Princess Ketchum♥
2nd September 2005, 6:53 PM
i already have help -absol-,anyway i will post some more soon XD

Sweet May
2nd September 2005, 7:25 PM
awesome fic so far MG..... i can't wait to see more ^^

Dragon Master Hunter
2nd September 2005, 7:30 PM
Very nice start

♥Princess Ketchum♥
3rd September 2005, 10:18 PM
Thanx i will send the 2nd half tomorrow XD

Nylf
3rd September 2005, 10:39 PM
;330; I'm blunt, a shipper and a Flygon trainer. Live with this. Ok heres a summary:
Description:Non-existent
Plot:Good, not too original, but looks good.
Grammar:Rubbish
Use of Smilies:THIS CATAGORY SHOULDN'T EXIST, SO GET RID OF THE SMILIES! simply describe their expression
Length:Fine.
Vocabulary: Do what I did. READ A DICTIONARY!
There you go. Hate me like I hate the twinklies that appear when I use my Flygon, or take my advise and become a great writer. Your choice. Now post, NOW!

Ember
3rd September 2005, 11:14 PM
Hi Mudkip_Girl! Like others have said before, I like the plot and setting but there needs to be more description and lenth. You also need to use quotation marks when someone's speaking. It could use to be a little longer, but the lenth is also fine where it is as well. Sorry if I'm being to picky. ^^;

♥Princess Ketchum♥
27th January 2006, 12:00 PM
i will do the second part very soon,have to write it up

Joe Vega #4
27th January 2006, 9:43 PM
Why did you post after three months saying you'll write the next chapter up soon? -_-' Don't you get what we're all saying here? This can't exist.