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mindripper
30th October 2005, 11:58 AM
There is a place I know

Where the pure waters boil and roil

In them the seed of freedom is sown

Serene sanity amongst the turmoil

So blend the crests and shadows there

That all seems so pendulously fair

--

Immerse there, be washed in your fears

Reminder of a life in arrear

Desperation and dream are one and the same

It is up to choice, which one to exclaim

--

Therein is the story of Water

Eloquent speech and sullied slur

A blending of the ugly truth

And beautified subterfuge

Fools want to live tomorrow, so they say

Alas, even today is a day too late

The wise have always lived yesterday

Choice is often the difference in fate


--

Fate is not so much a destination

But more the paths we take

Doubt itself needs no discrimination

Nor the paths we forsake


--

Choice is a stone that litters our path

Birthed of doubt, steeped in graft

There is naught a choice made faithfully true

But more of a choice making you

Speak of indecision to a lowly moose

For how can you choose not to choose?

--

If the world is a broad field of battle

In the bivouac of life

Would we choose to be driven cattle

Or heroes in the strife?


--

If the world seemed dark and grey

Would we then lose our way?

Without Winter’s harsh, icy sheen

Spring would seem a duller shade of green

Without time in the darkest valleys

Where despair from hearts often sallies

Would times at the top seem so pristine

Where hope never bubbles but always springs?

Where clarity lends to life’s reverie

Where reverie is seen in all life's clarity?

--

Would we choose to live in slumber

A life of bland figures and numbers

Or live life as best we can

The brightest flash in Eternity’s pan?


--

Would we choose to ride quietly into the night

Out of mind, and out of sight

Or choose to be our lives’ own light

Banishing the night, reaching the heights?

Lives of great men before us remind

That we can make our lives sublime

Death and despair we thus rescind

Elevate above the daily grind

Leave footprints on the sands of time

--

Footprints, a bastion of light

Hope amongst tethered blight

Lending strength to another

Who in sailing over life’s solemn main

Sees life in a grey deadened grain

A poor, lost and shipwrecked brother

Who on seeing is whole and takes heart again

Who was once lost, but found again

--

In between death and life’s pain

All to lose and none to gain

Truly how would we choose

Where life’s knots are never loose

Where one cannot struggle, only drown

Where Faith turns with a hinted frown

--

Do we give up, walk through the door

Or do we choose a last frenzied roar

Horror in the heart, fear on the lip

A defiant roar our Freudian Slip

In death and pain we choose to live

To walk through fear’s ogive

--

No matter what may chance this way

Whatever may hold highest sway

Despair may hold greatest weight

But our choice it cannot obviate

In darkness and sorrow choose to live

A soul in light is never in grief

Take heart from brothers akin

Draw comfort from the soul within

--

Ashes to ashes, dust to dust

Nothing is forever, nothing lasts

Forests wither, cities crumble

Rocks weather, oases sunder

Choices made under the ether

Last for now and forever

Once made can never be retrieved

Though the eyes may cry and soul beseech

Choose well, live and let live

Cross every bridge, mend every rift

--

Between cup and lip there is much betwixt

Rarely ends a tale with nary a twist

We are always what we choose to be

While others choose the way they see

Always choose to set yourself free

To become what you wanted to be

Many potholes lie in between

Never ask why it only could have been

--

Life is short and Time is fleeting

Our hearts will not forever be beating

Trust no future, however pleasant

Choose to act, and within the present

--

So various is the human mind

Such are the frailties of mankind

Never trust blindly in tomorrow

Today’s whim is the morrow’s sorrow

Regrets are wishes viewed clearer

Captured in yesterday’s mirror

--

Tomorrow will never die

But he who on his laurels lies

A dream he thus mistook

A choice he thus forsook

To his failure a wailing hymn

A dirge of sorrow within

A simple failure to choose

A play of Lament’s didgeridoo

In threnody a mournful keen

Tears unnumbered, dolor unseen

A death, a requiem for a dream


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mindripper
30th October 2005, 12:04 PM
As a small note from me, this poem is an offshoot of my previous one, the Song of Life. That one covered life in general, while this one, as well as my future works, will cover focused aspects of life, some of which were touched on in the Song of Life. These include Choice, as you can see, Justice, Goodbye, Despair, and so on.

I used a very fairy-tale approach for these works, and you should be able to tell. In my first work, I touched on the story of Water, and how it was the baeutiful lie, and the ugly truth. I touched a little more here, and it may make a return the next time. For those who do not understand why water is the ugly truth and the beautiful lie, feel free to ask.

Again, this is a content poem, and I use a very basic meter, which varies from stanza. I do take liberties when I need content over rhythm, but it is pretty sound, even though I do not over-emphasise on rhythm in any poem. Yes, this will be bundles with the Sng of Life for publishing. I have not forgotten about my charity work, and when I compile enough works, you will hopefully see them on the market. Thanks.

Kyle of Pallet
30th October 2005, 2:28 PM
Wonderful Poem mindripper. This was really touching.

I hope this is published soon. I give it **** (those are stars. Why does a four star rating look so messed up)

katiekitten
30th October 2005, 2:32 PM
This is (as I said for the song of life) Amazing. There are a few words that I have not heard of before and I will peek in dictionary.com to find out what they mean. You are a very talented writer, all I can say is that your poems tend to be sad. Nothing wrong with that, just noticing...

Very good. 10/10. :) *thumbs up*

Ice_Scyther
30th October 2005, 2:57 PM
Amazing. That was great. The Song of life was good, but this one was even better. I do hope it gets published soon.

Overall: ;123; (5/5 stars! Amazing!)

Ledian_X
30th October 2005, 2:59 PM
Like I said in PM, it's a real nice and intereesting poem. You obviously took a long time creating it. All I can say is good work and keep at it!

LX

Drayano
30th October 2005, 5:23 PM
Beautiful poem. You're good at making poems, that's for sure. Great tone and flow. Keep up the good work ^^.

Sakura Haruno
30th October 2005, 5:38 PM
great job mindripper keep up the good work... you have talent !! anyways i rate it 10/10 !!

Calcos the Destroyer
30th October 2005, 5:57 PM
Woah. This is win. Of the best. Fantabulous. A bit long, but it is soooooo beautiful and true....

mindripper
30th October 2005, 6:24 PM
Hey people. Thanks for the reviews.

To Katiekitten, which words di you not get? Perhaps if there are any problems I can explain? Let me know.

To Ice_scyther, I do not know about this poem being better than the Song of Life, because I really do like that one, but I guess Choice is pretty ok too.

To Ledian_X, quite a bit of time was taken for this one, and some amendments need to be made still. I do hope you all found it worth the while, though.

To Calcos, Dryano and Ashgirlsmayandmisty, thank you all as well. Anything this work amounts to is in part due to you.

whit19
30th October 2005, 6:29 PM
Another deep poem that I can't hope to fully comprehend. It was interestin anyway. :)

Hidden Mew
30th October 2005, 6:32 PM
Wow. This is such a great poem. It has a wonderful flow and it asks deep questions about life. I'm sure that this will get publish. Thanks you for sending me a message about this poem. It is a 5 star poem easily.

Chaos Absol
30th October 2005, 6:34 PM
A long poem compared to what I've seen before, but great.I haven't read Song of life before, I might sometime.But I don't really feel the need to.I have to give it a 9.7/10.It had me confused afew times, but overall still good.It reminded me of how I like to think:Pessimistic.And for that, I give you the absol award, meaning it has great sense and makes sense.I hope you continue to write stories!

Scar
30th October 2005, 6:47 PM
Nice job, mindripper. As others said, you've got a real talent for this. Very touching and meaningful. This easily deserves to be published, IMO.

My rating- 5/5

Xiang
30th October 2005, 6:50 PM
I love it! Your Pm was the call to a marvel unlike any other. Due to my limited knowledge (hey, what can I say? Not every eleven-year-old knows what threnody means.), I could not understand it completely, but someday I'll uncover it's true meaning. I just KNOW that it's good enough to be published.

...

I suck at reviewing poem-format fics.

travis_and_chelsea
30th October 2005, 8:13 PM
That! That was a cool story I really like it!! I read it twice to pick up what I missed. This is a good story. I hope you make more! Of course not on this. This is one shot but I hope you can make another one and also put chapters!

Demon_SLayer_of_War
30th October 2005, 8:30 PM
Put it up now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

billy5772
30th October 2005, 9:07 PM
Cool poem. I think it was a bit longer than it had to be, and thus, it lost some of its effectiveness. There were a lot of good lines, but in between them also some that I thought were unnecessary. Some almost straying off topic.


Regrets are wishes viewed clearer

Captured in yesterday’s mirror

That was a really good line. I liked it.

The flow of the poem was generally okay. How do I define “flow”? Well, I just mean how smoothly the words strung together as I read the thing in my head. Sometimes it was just kinda choppy.

You used a few “bookish” words that I didn’t quite know what they meant, but could infer. For example: “didgeridoo”. That’s not really a bad thing, but if it wasn’t necessary, maybe you should avoid it? Iono

Anyway, great job.

mindripper
30th October 2005, 9:17 PM
Thanks to each and every person who has reviewed. For those who have read both the works, thank you even more.

Rightm Billy's review is the first that I really have to answer, even though the rest of you people raised great points as well. Billy, I entirely accept the fact that the poem is long. You know the times when you just HAVE to say something in your works but cannot cut it short? Just sucks, does it not?

Just like the Song of Life, I placed content first and foremost. I covered most of the possible situations in which a choice defines a person, and what it entails. For eg, the cchoice of self-belief in bleak situations, choosing to be great at what you do, to achieve what you want. That everything in life is decided by choice, and that choices decide everything in life as well. It is complex, and I am not sure if the work captured every facet. This is really an inspirational work masquerading as a depressing poem.

I do like the fact that you took time to absorb though, and if you know me, you know I am a little superfluous at times. Tried to use older words like "main" and "ogive" to add an older feel to this peice. Didgeridoo adds an exotic feel, and is really justified if you ever heard the thing play before. I do accept that I seem to ramble at times, and am trying to do something about that. I did spend a fair bit of time, and I do hope that you can see this.

Thanks again to all.

qwerqwer
30th October 2005, 9:28 PM
it's really good and touching but to tell you the truth, i prefer short poems. But this one is really good

katiekitten
30th October 2005, 10:56 PM
Oh, it was just words like dolor, and threnody. :)

Felix Feral Fezirix
31st October 2005, 3:47 AM
A brain that has been awake till 3am and can already hardly figure things out coldn't absorb anything, but the brain still thinks it's great. THe rhyming is barely noticable as we get sucked up like bits of dirt into a vacuum cleaner that is your lines and words. It's fantastic, and I gave you a five on the thread rating. You have great talent, young Jedi. *finds self forcibly thrown from thread and hits post button just in time*

Nylf
31st October 2005, 1:42 PM
Great. Just great. Summarises a lot f the ideals I support. Choice, no turning back, you dead longer than your alive so make the best of your time alive. All in there and put across marvelously(sp?). Excellent. I expected no less.

TyraniRay
31st October 2005, 1:48 PM
That was deep man.

To take a quote from my rather long list, "Excellent."

You have a way words, don't lose your touch. I'm looking forward to more of your work.

PS, I'm not normally like this, I don't know why... Might be your poem.

EDIT: 10/10 by the way. Sorry about not having a longer review, I'm rather busy at the moment.

mindripper
31st October 2005, 9:08 PM
Oh, it was just words like dolor, and threnody.

You understand now, right? I love dolor!


it's really good and touching but to tell you the truth, i prefer short poems. But this one is really good

To be truthful, THANKS for the reivew, sincerely. You take the time, no need to feel apologetic about anything.


A brain that has been awake till 3am and can already hardly figure things out coldn't absorb anything, but the brain still thinks it's great. THe rhyming is barely noticable as we get sucked up like bits of dirt into a vacuum cleaner that is your lines and words

Was awake till five doing some designing and accounting stuff. Talk about brain dead. That was erm, a very creative way to describe my prose? HAha.



Great. Just great. Summarises a lot f the ideals I support. Choice, no turning back, you dead longer than your alive so make the best of your time alive. All in there and put across marvelously(sp?). Excellent. I expected no less.

Well, I expected more, truthfully. Next work on Justice or Goodbye will be better, I hope.


You have a way words, don't lose your touch. I'm looking forward to more of your work.

PS, I'm not normally like this, I don't know why... Might be your poem.

Glad to see that you are affected. I hope not to lose my touch either. You will see more work in the future. You can either check ot my older poem, the Song of Life, linked in sig, or wait for my next work, which I will complete as soon as possible.

Sike Saner
31st October 2005, 9:28 PM
;-; As ever, your vocabulary bowls me over, as does your excellently expressed philosophy...Style and substance. Boss. ^_^ This is easily the equal of The song of Life, if not its superior. The quality is there, definitely; plus, it manages to read as a completely different experience from The song of Life, even connected to that work as it is. It effectively manages to avoid reading as merely the same poem with different words - that speaks well of you as a poet; it tells that you are multifaceted in your abilities.

My favorite part, easily:


Regrets are wishes viewed clearer

Captured in yesterday’s mirror

YUM. Makes me think of Fogelberg lyrics.

I enthusiastically await the other companion pieces. ^_^

King of the Munchlax
31st October 2005, 10:43 PM
Very nice work... I found it very mystic and deep. It is a poem to inspire future poem writers. I feel calm and collected and carefree. I give it a 10/10, 5/5 stars, and 11 Tyranitars with a Shadow Lugia milkshake to the side.

Power Shot
31st October 2005, 10:52 PM
Not bad. I will be honest, poetry isn't really my thing, but you did pretty good. I thought there were some made up words, but that is my only thought, I might be wrong.

If you could, return the favor and review my fics.

Saffire Persian
31st October 2005, 11:39 PM
I got your PM.. but for some reason, It wouldn't let me reply. Anyway, I read this poem yesterday, just didn't review it, and I loved the usage of Requiem for a Dream in it - I think you do it justice. It makes a wonderful ending line. Hammer you? Naa.

My favorite lines, besides the ending line, would be this stanza in itself, beautiful:


Ashes to ashes, dust to dust

Nothing is forever, nothing lasts

Forests wither, cities crumble

Rocks weather, oases sunder

Choices made under the ether

Last for now and forever

Once made can never be retrieved

Though the eyes may cry and soul beseech

Choose well, live and let live

Cross every bridge, mend every rift

I loved it - especially the 'Ashes to ashes, dust to dust.' It's one of my favorite lines ever. It's always so satisfying to read your work - a nice work that is lyrical in every sense, with the magic you often can't find in regular stories.

I hope to see another one on the horizon.

mindripper
1st November 2005, 8:07 AM
To Sike Saner, thanks and it seems that the line you quoted is pretty well-liked by people, even though my personal favourtie is another. You will not have to wait long. I have this feeling Justice and Goodbye will be released soon.

To King of the Munchlax, thanks and I hope future writers can take heart as well. Perhaps you want to consider writing as well!

To Power Shot, do not worry, there are no made-up words. The closest would be didgeridoo, but I assure you that it is a word. Thanks for the review, even though poetry is not your thing. Hope to change your perception on that.

To Saffire Persian, I had to let you know that I was using that line. It would only have been fair. WHile I did not ask for a review, thanks for one anyway. That particular bit (requiem for a dream) was among my favourite parts of the poem, and am glad you like it too. Thanks for the review, and while I would not say that it was "magical", I guess it is good to a certai extent. Hope to improve on the next one, though.

Avenger Angel
2nd November 2005, 5:10 AM
Okay, I promised a review and here it is. Sorry for the delay, it gets a bit hard to read stuff with a 40 hour work week.

9.0/10 - Honestly, it was a nice pleasure to read this, and a lot of it is very relevant throughout time. I like your choice of words, rhymes, and wordplay, and it all weaves together for a nice finish.

Also, I like how it’s almost like a collection of “mini-poems” all strung together like beads on a necklace. It creates an interesting effect when each one is read after the other.

In all, excellent work and clever use of imagination and wordplay.

mindripper
2nd November 2005, 8:55 AM
^Thanks for the time, even though you have a stict schedule to keep. Hopefully, the next piece will be good as well.

I will review your work in return. Need some time but will eventually catch up. Least I could do in reciprocation for your courtesy.

Spewy05
2nd November 2005, 7:39 PM
I like poems, and so I read this one. Difficult to understand! But still good! "Cookie fo you!" Want to see more

Dilasc
2nd November 2005, 8:12 PM
This is rather deep. I like the way you write. Even though I'm not much of a poem person, or too great a reviewer, I must say I am impressed.

Tale
2nd November 2005, 8:33 PM
What can I say? Really?

Amazing, Mindripper, as usual. Theres nothing more to say, I loved it, just like every other work of yours.

Fantastic job.

mindripper
3rd November 2005, 9:30 PM
I like poems, and so I read this one. Difficult to understand! But still good! "Cookie fo you!" Want to see more
Thanks for that.


This is rather deep. I like the way you write. Even though I'm not much of a poem person, or too great a reviewer, I must say I am impressed.

Yeah, well it was meant to convey meaning, so I guess i had no choice but to make it deep.


What can I say? Really?

I would really welcome critique. I want to improve as well. But thanks for the review. Very kind.

Air Dragon
4th November 2005, 4:33 PM
Birthed of doubt, steeped in graft

instead of "birthed" try "borne"

A defiant roar our Freudian Slip

is that: "A defiant roar 'gainst our Freudian Slip"?

All in all, i loved it. keep it up. i'll keep an eye out for anything you publish... don't take the criticism too hard, i'm working on a first fic too. Later!

Air Dragon
4th November 2005, 4:35 PM
ps: may i add that poems don't always rhyme, so don't be stressed out by trying to make yours do so. just write what comes naturally from within. Right, Later!

mindripper
4th November 2005, 8:48 PM
Birthed of doubt, steeped in graft

instead of "birthed" try "borne"

A defiant roar our Freudian Slip

is that: "A defiant roar 'gainst our Freudian Slip"?

Borne is possible instead of birthed, but I felt that the latter was classier and paired up with "steeped" much better.

As for the defiant roar, I think you misunderstood. That line takes place when one is in a desperate situation, but chooses hope/life instead of dejection, and even under a geography of fear, the metaphorical "defiant roar" thus becomes a Freudian Slip, something uttered subconsciously to go opposite to the situation.

Yes I know that poems do not need to rhyme, but it just so happens that I had a pretty ok time rhyming my lines. It was the content I was worried about.

Tempest
6th November 2005, 1:12 AM
This poem rocks! *Goes to read again*, yep still rocks! It really touched me and it had a poetic aura all around it. I got a poem published into a anthology once but it wasn't this good! Definitely try and publish this! Your choice of words were fantastic! You forgot a few letters here and there but that was probably an accident. I'm certain you can get this published. You have true poetic talent. Thanks for sending me a PM about this or I would have never found it. This is truely amazing. I have one question, could you reply to my fic? It's called "A Hoenn Adventure" and I would really appreciate your help. It's in the fanfic forum. Keep up your good work, don't let your talent die! TTFN!

Flaming Lip
6th November 2005, 2:02 AM
Ahh nice, it suitibly covers how, instead of there being only one or the other, choice and fate co-exsist. You do a good job of covering broad topics. Something I can't do well.

Though, I dissagree. Flow is important, so is simplicity. Without flow, it's really just a chunk of words. Some words don't work, sound awkward, and therefore detract from the beauty of the work.

mindripper
6th November 2005, 7:33 AM
^Right, I have to agree that no matter how good one is, there is still room for improvement. Usage of certain words adds to feel, but can detract from flow. It is a very subtle thing, and I do think that you have been at that particualr crossroad before. As you said, without flow, any work is a chunk of words, but without feel, then flowing prose would still be nothing more than a rhythmically assimilated work, right? I value feel slightly over flow, but of course I am still working to get the best of both worlds. Thanks.

Firaga Metagross
7th November 2005, 11:52 PM
4 claws up!
(I can do that cuz' i'm a metagross)

-;376;

Spewy05
8th November 2005, 2:02 PM
Where is the next piece? I am waiting.

mindripper
8th November 2005, 9:49 PM
Firage, thanks for the review.

Spewy, Justice will be released soon. Very very soon. A little busy to finish off the last bit. A while longer before release.

Odem General
9th November 2005, 9:03 PM
Loved it!! Especially this bit:
Life is short and Time is fleeting

Our hearts will not forever be beating

Trust no future, however pleasant

Choose to act, and within the present

dunno why though.......oh well. keep up the excellent work :D

Encyclopika
9th November 2005, 9:12 PM
Wow...
again, better than anything I could ever make.
Please post another, for my sake.
Don't forget to PM me
So that I can take in what you see.

XP
Awsome poem dude. :) Seriously...post more.

Wes
10th November 2005, 12:57 AM
Very ...or pretty deep I shall say. Not bad poem at all Mindripper....not bad at all...I notice you like to make many of your writing about life one way or another....which isn't bad but instead deep, interesting, and coll instead Ahem....very good poem inded and good luck with future works.

indigestible_wad
10th November 2005, 4:05 AM
It's very nice. But I have to be honest. I just skimmed over it, only fully reading some parts. THe parts that I did notice were very well written, and had amazing word choice. You must really think about these things hard.

mindripper
10th November 2005, 9:00 PM
Thanks to all for the reviews. Glad you all enjoyed it. Next piece will be out soon. Next one will be much more sombre, and uses more of a story format than the last two.

Typhlogirl
12th November 2005, 9:26 PM
ARGH. I'M LATE. AGAIN.

Anyway.

That was fantastic Mindripper. You have quite the talent for words and poetry. I liked your stanza length, it was very unique. Though I do think you should try and stick to a basic number of lines per stanza. The poem flowed very well, and the use of more uncommon words was a very nice touch.

My favourite part?


Ashes to ashes, dust to dust

Nothing is forever, nothing lasts

Forests wither, cities crumble

Rocks weather, oases sunder

Very definate and final. Love it.

All in all, I really do hope you get this published, along with tSoL, because they are really both incredibly good poems.

Bye now!

-;157;

Insincerus
13th November 2005, 6:17 PM
I'm lost for words. Literally. That was so grand I couldn't interpret it with my wittle cat brain :S

It was magnificent, for sure, but I understood only 3/4 of what you said, which really frightened me because that mean I be teh dumb. You certainly dumbfounded me for sure...this belongs in a book, not the Internet. A more humble place suited for a glorious poem.

mindripper
13th November 2005, 7:46 PM
Thanks for the reviews. Working on the publishing thing, need more works though, but it seems that companion pieces are easier to publish, so you never know what may happen on that front.

I will not dare say this is a magnificent work. It is good enough, I believe, but I cannot really say that I am entirely satisfied. But it heartens me to see that people appreciate it. Thanks a lot.

Brian Powell
14th November 2005, 10:42 AM
I have said it before and I’ll say it again, I don’t know much about poetry.

But as I continued reading, the more interesting it got. And another thing is, everything you said in this poem about is true. Like this one…


Nothing is forever, nothing lasts
One of the facts that is true.

I could go on and pick more but like you wrote…


Life is short and Time is fleeting
lol

Rating: 3.5/5 (Sorry, I’m not a poetry person but still)

EDIT:
Can you check my new fic, Pokemon Impact 3 (http://serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?t=89083)? Thanks.

mindripper
14th November 2005, 10:27 PM
^Sorry, but if you saw any flaws could you just let me know about them?

Brian Powell
15th November 2005, 11:40 AM
^I didn't see any flaws, I'm just not a poetry kind of person.

legendaryrider
17th November 2005, 12:52 AM
Would we choose to ride quietly into the night

Out of mind, and out of sight

Or choose to be our lives’ own light

Banishing the night, reaching the heights?

Lives of great men before us remind

That we can make our lives sublime

Death and despair we thus rescind

Elevate above the daily grind

Leave footprints on the sands of time

this paragraph is the best in the entire poem. this is better than anything i can wright i can only wright good things when I'm angry.

mindripper
20th November 2005, 9:44 PM
^Thanks for the kind words. What is up with the anger thingy anyway? Not exactly a good sign, is it?

GoldenHouou
27th November 2005, 10:36 PM
Okay, first of all, I want to apoligize. I know I said I would read this ages ago, but well, I forgot... I´m sure there are some other things I should be doing now as well, like reading something... But I forgot what...

Ah, anyway...

Well, I´m still not good at rating poems actually, so, er, don´t expect a perfect review from me. But, anyway...


It was good, just like last time. As I read it, I imagined the things in my mind. Now if there just would have been someone to read it aloud, the "sentiment" would have bee perfect.

Still, few times it felt... I don´t know, out of the subject, maybe? Like it would have been part of something else, regarding something else than choices. It could just be me, for I am not anything near a poetriest or anyway poetric (sp?) person.

But it does show the importance of choices really well, and its truthful. Once we have made a choice, we can´t reverse it. It will always be that way, even though we would try to change it and turn back, its done.

Ah, but anyway, you should keep on writing the poems. I would as well if I could, but since I can´t, I´ll leave that to you.

Once again, I apologize. *Bows and leaves*

Magneto
29th November 2005, 1:35 PM
wonderful...I love it.

legendaryrider
23rd December 2005, 6:19 PM
^Thanks for the kind words. What is up with the anger thingy anyway? Not exactly a good sign, is it?

for me it is a good thing. it means i'm healthy. infact any emotion means i'm healthy.