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~Espeon~
4th December 2005, 1:03 AM
In Professor Elm's Lab it's 3 pokemon trainer 2 boys and 1 girl

Professor Elm: hi choose 3 first pokemon who want choose first?
Delfina: me first i choose a chikorita
Professor: ok Delfina your first pokemon is chikorita
Delfina got a Chikorita (Female)!
Alan: my turn i choose a totodile
Professor Elm: ok Alan your first pokemon is totodile
Alan got a Totodile (Male)!
Professor: ok Wictor your first pokemon is Cyndaquil
Wictor: thank you professor elm i like best cyndaquil!
Wictor got a Cyndaquil (Male)!
Delfina: i must go see you later in cherrycove city
Wictor: sure
Alan: yes we shall go

10 minutes later

Delfina: aha a cubone it want me catch
Delfina: go Chikorita!
Chikorita: chiko chiko!
Cubone: cubone!
Delfina: chikorita use wine whip
Chikorita: CHIKO!
BOOM!
Cubone: CUBONE!
Chikorita: chiko *kissing at cubone*
Delfina: oh my god chikorita
Cubone: cu.. cu.. *confused*
Chikorita: chiko
BOOM!
Cubone: CUBONE!
Delfina: go pokeball!
Delfina: yes i got a cubone (male)!
Delfina: oh no cubone we must go to pokémon center come back Chikorita!
Sister Joy: hi who are you?
Delfina: my name is Delfina can you help at my Cubone?
Sister Joy: sure Delfina
Chikorita: Chiko *crying at cubone*
Delfina: dont cry Chikorita, Cubone coming be fine
BOOM!
Delfina: hey who are that!
Team rocket: that troble double trouble we present us Cassidy, Butch Team rocket nothing can not us so be ready your battle and we shall steal your Cubone!

To be Continued.....

Dilasc
4th December 2005, 1:06 AM
Oh the script and lack of work,
way to go, you tug my irk.

Script=bad, especially when its rushed and improper script. All in all, the characters are bland and uninteresting. This is on the path of being closed.

Dont give yourself a star rating. That's just wrong, and improper. I will fix this with a 1 star rating.

~Espeon~
4th December 2005, 1:13 AM
but why i thinking maybe fine oh sorry i thinking this should be fine ^^

Dilasc
4th December 2005, 1:15 AM
Uh, what'd you just say? I can't understand amongst your jumbled words and lack of grammar. I'm sorry, ou'll need to rework your fic, or risk closure from the mods... not like there's much hope anyway.

~Espeon~
4th December 2005, 1:17 AM
hey you changed rating to bad GGRRR