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    I'm not your goal, remember! she thought angrily. Your boss didn't declare today's mission Make Lucki's Life Suck!
    XDD

    And maybe I should be running right now rather than thinking about all this.
    Yeah, I’d reckon so. XP


    Righteous, Lucki has a Tropius now! I like those things. ^^ Poor Tropius, though, losing his wings like that…Although, I do wonder if perhaps those might regenerate. Hmm. At any rate, the fact that Tropius gets to stick around is definitely a nice development. =)

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    Haven't been here for a while... But then again, I haven't been anywhere else, either. Sorry for the extremely belated reviews...

    I like the way these last couple of Chapters have been moving the plot along, though I have to wonder how resilient that Tropius is to mere physical pain... *shakes head* Still, it's a very good Pokémon for her to have. And it'll be really helpful if it can manage to keep its wings from being destroyed every ten minutes. At least Lucki will be reunited with her other Pokémon soon! It'll be a relief for her, I'll bet.

    One minor typo I spotted in Chapter 11:
    "You're got to get moving, they're going to get you!"
    I think you meant "You've" there.


    Anyway, really nice couple of Chapters, and I look forward to the next one!

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    Quote Originally Posted by icemew View Post
    He started to chase, only to swear as a flurry of razor leaf cut him off.
    I don't know, to me this sounds kinda awkward. Try "...as he was cut off by a sudden flurry of razor-sharp leaves launched by Tropius."

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    They were yellowing and wilting despite the superpotion she'd sprayed on them, but he seemed not to mind.
    Super Potion

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    hyperbeam
    Hyper Beam

    Now, with my grammar stuff out of the way, onto the review!
    Enter Team Aqua! The plot thickens with the second team showing up. It'll be interesting to see how you develop them, whether they turn out to be friend or foe. Still, Lucki owes it to them that she can get her Pokemon back- unless something else happens on the way to Fortree...

    I thought this chapter was a bit on the short side, but otherwise it was really good. I'm looking for things to pick up even more after Lucki gets her Pokemon back and is able to take the battle right to Team Magma!

    Poor Tropius... I hope their wings grow back eventually. At least he's safe as part of Lucki's team now. Because you know that some wild Pokemon wouldn't hesitate to take advantage of it in its wounded state.

    A very enjoyable chapter, and the introduction of Team Aqua only makes it more intriguing.

    Quote Originally Posted by icemew View Post
    I'm not your goal, remember! she thought angrily. Your boss didn't declare today's mission Make Lucki's Life Suck! So quit chasing me already!
    By far the best line in the chapter. But you know that news about her will eventually make their way to Maxie, and he *will* make getting rid of Lucki his top priority someday...

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    Tropius joins Lucki's crew! And the others will be reunited with her soon! WOOOOOT!

    I'm not your goal, remember! she thought angrily. Your boss didn't declare today's mission Make Lucki's Life Suck! So quit chasing me already!
    LOL Loved that!

    And maybe I should be running right now rather than thinking about all this.
    As Sike Saner said, I’d reckon so. XD

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sike Saner
    Poor Tropius, though, losing his wings like that…
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    though I have to wonder how resilient that Tropius is to mere physical pain... *shakes head*
    Quote Originally Posted by DarkPersian479
    Poor Tropius... I hope their wings grow back eventually.
    Well that was certainly a good attention-grabbing event *takes notes for future chapters*

    Thanks for pointing out the mistakes, The Pokemon Master, DarkPersian479, I've fixed it.

    Quote Originally Posted by The Pokemon Master
    I like the way these last couple of Chapters have been moving the plot along
    You haven't see anything yet... >.>

    Quote Originally Posted by DarkPersian479
    Enter Team Aqua! The plot thickens with the second team showing up. It'll be interesting to see how you develop them, whether they turn out to be friend or foe.
    They'll be popping up a lot more now, so you should be able to figure out soon. Although you might be surprised...

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    Quote Originally Posted by icemew
    You haven't see anything yet... >.>
    DUN DUN DUNNN!

    Sorry, couldn't help it. Anyway, you're quite welcome. I'm just sorry I didn't review earlier!

    Hmm... Wonder what that meant, though... What exactly is going to happen in Fortree, anyway (apart from Lucki getting her Pokémon back)? The usual Gym Battle? Or maybe something extra? Guess I'll just have to wait and see...

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    Ugh. This would have been posted earlier today, but I've been really sick.

    Oh, and Happy Halloween, everyone!


    Chapter Thirteen - Warning

    "Um, my Tropius," Lucki explained as she handed over the pokeball, "he was wild and his wings were really ripped up and -"

    Nurse Joy held up one hand. "Normal, don't worry. Tropius normally shed and regrow their wings at intervals, and they drop them when damaged as well. That's why they can have such flimsy wings, because they're easy to regrow. They don't even have nerve endings in them."

    "Oh, that's a relief."

    "You'll have to wait a short while between wilting and regrowing its wings before it's able to fly or use moves that require its wings, but it's not more than an occasional inconvenience. Just leave it out for a bit so it can finish sprouting its leaves." She handed back three different pokeballs. "Here are your other pokemon. You didn't have any others, right?"

    "Right," Lucki replied. "Just a Squirtle, Flareon and Electrike."

    Nurse Joy smiled. "Good, that's what's here. So far we haven't had any problems with missing pokemon, but it never hurts to ask."

    "Yeah." Lucki headed to sit on a couch for a few minutes while her Tropius healed, with other trainers watching TV.

    "Rumor has it," the news anchorman stated, "that after their just-foiled attack on trainers on Route 119, Team Magma is planning something in the Mt. Chimney area, with unsubstantiated reports coming in of Team Magma member sightings. Team Aqua, heroes of the past two attacks, offered to check out the area, but were rebuffed by residents. Flannery of the Lavaridge Gym explained." The image switched to Flannery standing outside her gym with a reporter. "We don't believe there's a problem right now, and I think having Team Aqua here would invite Team Magma to show up and cause more trouble. We'd like to stay out of both team's affairs."

    "Lucki," called Nurse Joy. "Your Tropius has been healed."

    "Thanks," Lucki told her, taking the pokeball and heading out.

    Team Magma had definitely made for a major delay, but things were looking up now, Lucki decided. She had her fourth pokemon, a grass-flying type who would help cover her team's weaknesses, and she was in Fortree ready to get her fourth badge.

    If she could find the gym, of course. Fortree was perhaps the weirdest town in all of the three regions. Rather than clearing out a patch of forest and building homes there, the people of Fortree had chosen to build their homes in the trees themselves, carving out sections for their houses, building platforms for porches, and stringing bridges between in place of streets. And because the residents spent so much time above ground, the way below was overgrown with vegetation and impassible. Sections were kept clear for human use, but they could only be reached at certain points by climbing about in the trees.

    Lucki headed for the nearest ladder and climbed up onto the large wooden platform. She looked around, spying the gym. There was a ladder down to it several trees away. She stepped off the platform onto the suspended bridge, holding onto the rope railing as she stepped from wooden slat to wooden slat, the whole thing swaying as she moved. Native residents of the town might be willing to run casually about, but she was going to walk carefully. It was a good thing she wasn't especially scared of heights, or this would be impossible.

    And there was the gym! Lucki climbed down the rope ladder and started toward it at a fast jog, only to run into something, knocking her backward to land on her butt. She got back up and stuck a hand out into the area, only to find the air had returned to its normal intangible state.

    Okay...that was weird. There was something about it that seemed a little familiar though. She thought she'd learned about a pokemon that did something like this in school, although she couldn't remember which.

    She walked more slowly to the gym, only to find the door locked. A notice on the door explained the gym was closed to deal with a Kecleon infestation and should be open again in a day or so.

    Kecleon! That's right, they can become invisible by blending perfectly into their surroundings. Sometimes they migrate into a town and cause trouble. Lucki remembered now, it had been mentioned in a lesson about the different kinds of problems caused by wild pokemon.

    Well, there was no chance of getting her fourth badge today. Oh well. I could use the chance to chance to train, and maybe I'll be able to get a fifth pokemon. Lucki turned to head back to the ladder, only to slam into not-so-thin air again. This time she distinctly heard a soft squeak.

    "I can see how this could get annoying," Lucki muttered. She picked up a stone from the ground and threw it, hard, in the direction of the ladder. It thunked against something standing right in front of the ladder. A Kecleon's green head became visible about two feet off the ground, its two eyes rotating to focus on her for a second, then it scampered to the right, becoming invisible again.

    Lucki hurried toward the ladder before another one could in the way, then continued to the right. She'd spent more than enough time on Route 119. She'd go to Route 120 instead of heading back there.

    She headed east. It was late afternoon, so she'd only have a few hours before she should go back to the Pokecenter for the night.

    The thick, exceptionally grass by the side of the road was similar to that she'd spent time struggling through on Route 119, although the air here was chillier and there was a dry wind blowing rather than humid, still air.

    I should probably train with Saurius a bit, Lucki thought. She would need to have an idea of the Tropius' in-battle ability before trying to beat Winona. She released the grass/flying type. He needed to spend an hour or so out to give his wings time to unfurl. The green bumps on his shoulders had grown into large protrusions, but they were still balled up tightly.

    She headed off the main path to explore, avoiding the thickest clumps of grass where walking was hardest.

    Lucki headed through the trees for a bit, just seeing a few Zigzagoon out of the corner of her eye and the tops of a couple Oddish that had buried themselves for the day. A small flock of Wingull flew overhead. There might have been Kecleon around – if any of them could tear themselves away from getting in people's way over in Fortree, Lucki thought – but if there were, they were invisible.

    Saurius' wings finally unfurled. They were a pale, delicate green. He flapped them a few times and seemed satisfied. She recalled him, wondering if she'd have better luck finding pokemon by herself.

    She kept going. It was getting late. She'd have to go back soon.

    Twilight was just beginning, at that point where everything seems clearer even as the color fades to grey, when Lucki came to a small clearing. There, lying against a rock in the grass, was a sleeping Absol.

    Lucki took a step forward. A fallen leaf crunched underfoot and the Absol's eyes snapped open in the same instant. It stood, facing her.

    "Go, Flare," Lucki decided. "Flamethrower!"

    The dark type leaped upward. The flamethrower shot underneath, hitting the rock and spraying outward around the smooth stone. A half second later the Absol landed and sprang forward, slashing Flare's side from neck to tail with enough force to knock him back several feet. He staggered and collapsed, the gash bleeding freely.

    Perhaps two seconds had elapsed.

    Lucki recalled him, picking Saurius' pokeball and throwing it out next. "Razor leaf!" The grass type beat his new wings sharply, sending a cluster of smaller leaves shooting at his opponent, who darted left in a dodge then shot forward again at the Tropius. Saurius twisted and beat his wings again, forcing the Absol to turn sharply to the side to avoid the leaves, breaking off its attack. He sent a third flurry after the four-legged pokemon, making it retreat slightly.

    "Body slam!" called Lucki.

    Saurius charged, lumbering toward the Absol at a rapidly increasing speed. The Absol stood its ground until the last second, when it slid to the side, ducking under the wings and slashing open his side. Saurius bellowed.

    "Razor leaf!" she shouted again. Saurius beat his wings again. The Absol tried to dodge but only managed to get halfway clear of the cloud with its jump. The remaining leaves sliced the Absol's body, but it didn't react, landing neatly from the jump and launching itself forward again for another slash attack.

    "Fly!" Lucki called, hoping his wings were ready. The Tropius began to flap his four wings rapidly as they stretched to their fullest length. The Absol reached him just before he became airborne, slicing him across the chest and leaving another gash in his brown body. A moment later he was out of range. The Absol watched silently, pacing slowly beneath. Once Saurius reached a sufficient height, he dropped. He looked like he'd hit the ground ten or so feet away from the Absol, but at the last second he flared his wings, turning the speed of the fall into forward motion, shooting across the ground into the Absol before it could dodge. The Absol took the move silently, twisting its body and rolling with the attack so that it wound up in the air, with Saurius moving under it. He was still moving faster than the Absol even after striking it, and the dark type raked his neck and back as he passed under.

    Saurius staggered as he landed, while the Absol completed its flip and landed gracefully, launching forward again the instant its paws touched the earth. It jumped him from behind, digging its claws into his back and biting into his neck. He bellowed again, struggling to shake the Absol off. It leaped free as Lucki recalled him.

    The Absol landed in the grass, watching her.

    Lucki had an idea. "Go, Raiden!" The wiry electric-type should be able to keep up. "Spark!"

    Raiden tensed, gathering the electricity around himself, then tossed the sparking cloud of energy toward the Absol, who dodged aside easily, then darted forward.

    "Quick attack!" Lucki shouted. Raiden blurred forward, but the Absol twisted aside, avoiding the attack and raking him across the shoulder with its claws.

    Maybe... "Okay, wait!" Lucki called.

    The Manectric slowed to a stop and glanced back for a second before focusing on the Absol again, which was creeping to the side, then lunged for him.

    "Thunderwave!" Lucki shouted at the last second. Startled, Raiden released an unfocused, all-around shock like that of the Electrode in Wattson's gym. The Absol tried to dodge, but it was impossible. The attack hit and the Absol spasmed in paralysis. Lucki threw a pokeball. It hit the Absol, turning it red and sucking it inside, only to burst open again immediately.

    But the Absol was looking worse. It stumbled slightly as it stood up, no longer so graceful.

    Quickly, Lucki called, "Quick attack! Bite!"

    Raiden slammed into the Absol. It managed to recover and twist away from the following bite, but it didn't counterattack. Instead it jumped back.

    "Another quick attack!" Lucki shouted.

    Raiden ran at the Absol, who tried to dodge. He hit it glancingly and it clawed him viciously in response, opening bloody cuts on his chest and side, then jumped back again. Raiden was staggering himself now too, but he was still standing.

    "Quick attack, and spark!" Lucki called.

    Energy built around Raiden. He ran at the Absol, who managed to twist out of the way only to be hit by the spark attack.

    Lucki threw another pokeball. This time, it held.

    She sprayed a super potion over Raiden's injures, then recalled him. Then Lucki opened the Absol's pokeball.

    It materialized standing, facing her. "Release me."

    "You talk!" Lucki gasped.

    Her voice was smooth and silky, a seductive milk and honey sound, faintly exotic and utterly alien.

    "Release me," the Absol said again in the same beautiful voice.

    "Hey, wait a second," Lucki told her. "I'm not a bad guy. I guess wild pokemon tell stories about us," she admitted, remembering how Raiden had acted, "but we're really not like that."

    The Absol seemed unmoved. "Release me," she said a third time.

    Lucki sighed. "Look, just give me a chance, okay? If you don't like being my pokemon and still want me to let you go, I will."

    "You'll regret this," the Absol said. "I am disaster."

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    Ah, good, Saurius’s wings did regenerate. I reckoned that they would—regeneration and renewal are qualities I’ve long associated with the Grass type.

    And holy flirking shnit, ABSOL. ^^ Yeah, those things are just effing cool. That one put up a considerable fight, too, which made for some nice reading. =) Judging by that and what she said after she was captured…uh, yeah. I get the distinct feeling that Lucki’s going to wish she hadn’t caught her…

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    Oho! This Absol seems a little different than most normal Pokémon, doesn't it? And I enjoyed the way you worked the Keckleon infestation in. Quite humorous. Glad to see that Tropius got its wings back fairly quickly (although I'm beginning to suspect that they might just fall off at a very inconvenient moment, such as a battle with Winona). And Lucki's got a fifth Pokémon on her team after a pretty drawn-out battle! I agree with Sike, too, Absol are quite an interesting species... Anyway, good job as usual, no errors that I found, and I hope the next Chapter comes along soon!

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    oooohhh...An Absol
    I wonder what it's name is
    Perhaps     Spoiler:- possible name hidden in green ink:

    I enjoyed ths chapter
    The foreshadowing was intrigueing
    I can't wait for the next chapter
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    Heh, Absol are hard to catch in the game, too. I remember having to go through six Ultra Balls to catch the thing when it was paralyzed! I do have a feeling that it's going to create problems for our intrepid young heroine later though...

    We'd like to stay out of this both team's affairs
    Don't need to have "this" in the sentence

    She handed back three different pokeballs. "Here are your other pokemon.
    Pokemon and Pokeballs are both capitalized

    and se was in Fortree ready to get her fourth badge.
    "se" is "she", I assume?

    Overly picky grammar aside, this was very enjoyable. The battle against Absol was well articulated and this new capture is truly an interesting specimen...

    Yay for Tropius' wings growing back! That would have been a huge handicap in battle. Now, if only Lucki can find Winona without crashing headlong into a Kecleon again...

    And it seems that Team Aqua doesn't have the best of reputations considering Lavaridge doesn't want their type in town. The interaction and relationship between the two teams looks to provide another interesting subplot in all of this.

    Another very nice, engaging chapter. I eagerly await the next installment...
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    What the Phweeeeeeeeeeeet?!! an ABSOL?! this is looking sweet! "I am diasater" hunh? oh well... guess he's being hard on himself again...interesting development, definitely...

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    This is getting soooo interesting! Keep it up!


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    Quote Originally Posted by Sike Saner
    Saurius’s wings did regenerate. I reckoned that they would—regeneration and renewal are qualities I’ve long associated with the Grass type.
    Me too. Potted plants are always losing leaves and growing new ones, so why not Tropius?

    Quote Originally Posted by The Pokemon Master
    This Absol seems a little different than most normal Pokémon, doesn't it?
    Well, maybe a tad...

    shadowlight, interesting guesses! You'll have to wait until next chapter, though.

    DarkPersian479, thanks for finding those mistakes, I've fixed them.

    Quote Originally Posted by DarkPersian479
    Pokemon and Pokeballs are both capitalized
    Well, I haven't been doing it for the rest of the story, so I don't think I should start now. It'd be inconsistent...

    Quote Originally Posted by DarkPersian479
    And it seems that Team Aqua doesn't have the best of reputations considering Lavaridge doesn't want their type in town.
    Well, they're both kind of new teams, so people aren't really sure. Flannery means mostly that inviting Team Aqua in would be like inviting Team Magma to come after them and make the place a battlefield...kind of like having the Black Panthers come over to keep a town safe, making it a target for the KKK. If Team Magma seems to be leaving them alone, no reason to attract trouble, right?

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    Chapter Fourteen - Skies, Clouded or Clear

    "I know that's not really true," Lucki comforted.

    The Absol was silent.

    "Really, I like you," Lucki continued. I don't care about old superstitions, no one believes those these days. Just stay with me for a while and then you can decide if you still want to leave."

    "You honestly..." she said, Lucki interpreting the Absol's inscrutable tone as stunned.

    "Just give me a chance," Lucki repeated. She recalled the Absol.

    The twilight had deepened into night. She hurried back to get to the Pokecenter.

    ***

    Lucki woke up the next morning feeling great. She got dressed and glanced at her reflection in the mirror only to suddenly realize her pendant was gone.

    She paused in shock, then looked frantically around her room. It was nowhere to be found. Grabbing her bag she rushed out.

    "Nurse Joy," she asked desperately, "I lost my necklace! Have you seen one anywhere?"

    Nurse Joy reached into one of the pockets of her apron and pulled out the green and gold necklace. "Is this it? One of the links on the chain broke."

    "Yes, thank you!" Lucki told her, taking it gratefully.

    "You should be more careful," chided the pokemon nurse. "That necklace looks expensive, and I'm sure you don't want to lose it."

    "No," she agreed. "Um, is there anyone here who can fix it?"

    Nurse Joy nodded. "Sure." She gave Lucki directions to the local jeweler. "He shouldn't have any problem fixing the chain."

    "Thanks!" Lucki told her again. "Oh, do you know if the gym is open today?"

    "Winona said that should be open in an hour or two."

    "Okay." Lucki headed off.

    Like everything else, the jeweler's storefront was located inside one of the mammoth trees. It was at ground level though, his house probably the second hollowed area above it. Lucki headed inside and explained her problem.

    "Sure," he replied. "That won't be hard. Give me about an hour, I have to finish up something else first."

    "Thanks. I don't know why I was so unlucky..." she added, wondering about the Absol. She was surprised when he laughed suddenly.

    "Gold is a delicate metal," he explained. "And this is a very thin, frail chain. I'd say you were quite lucky that it held up so long, and that when it did break, it wasn't while you were outside or anywhere else it'd be lost for good."

    "Oh," Lucki responded, feeling a lot better.

    She thanked him again and headed out.

    Lucki headed west again to the route. This time she saw some other trainers about. She walked up to the first one. "Hi, I'm Lucki," she introduced. "Want to battle?"

    The boy nodded. "Sure," he replied. "My name is Otto. Two on two work for you?" he asked, picking a greatball off his waist.

    "Sure."

    "Go!" Otto threw a pokeball into the air. It opened to reveal a light, almost white gray pokemon with a dark grey belly, small pointed jointless legs, a blunt spike in the middle of its back and black spots on its back and head, which was oversized and football-shaped, almost the same size as its small body. An equally black ring was around either eye, which were each a clear, startling light blue.

    Lucki had wanted to have a practice battle with the Absol, or at least Saurius, but neither of them would do well against the steel/rock Aron before her. "Go, Flare!" she yelled. "Flamethrower!"

    The fluffy red and white pokemon appeared, immediately exhaling a long stream of fire that hit the steel type directly.

    "Dig!" shouted Otto quickly. The Aron's small legs began rapidly digging into the earth. Within moments it was underground, out of reach of Flare's attacks and out of sight of either of them.

    "Okay, Flare, just wait for it and use flamethrower when it appears."

    Flare nodded, shifting his footing slightly and standing ready. But when the pokemon hit him from below on his underbelly, he yelped rather than retaliated as he was knocked into the air. He landed on his side and skidded. He got back up, dirt and grass in the fur on his side.

    "Flare!" Lucki called, exasperated. "Focus!"

    He dropped his head slightly. "Sorry."

    "Take down!" the boy ordered.

    "Dodge, quick!"

    Flare jumped aside in time for the Aron to charge past, moving too fast for it to correct its course.

    Yes!"Okay, another flamethrower!"

    Flare seared the slowing steel type with another burst of of flame. This time it was the one to yelp.

    Quickly Otto announced, "Dig again!"

    Before it had quite came to a halt, the rock type had begun burrowing into the turf again, quickly making another hole in the ground and protecting itself.

    "Okay Flare. This time pay attention!"

    "I'll get it," he told her, bracing himself.

    After several seconds, the Aron erupted from the ground, striking Flare. He hit it back with a blast of flames powerful enough to send it back against the earth, although, Lucki noticed, not as well as Silver had when Lucki had tried the strategy with the small turtle. He landed on his side again.

    The Aron's side and head were blackened. Lucki didn't know if it was tired or not.

    "Take down!" Otto shouted.

    The armor pokemon charged at Flare, who was still struggling to his feet. He didn't manage in time, just barely making it up before the Aron reached him. He was struck hard, skidding across the clearing into a tree. Still on his side, he inhaled and sent an ember to strike the Aron head on.

    "Great! Finish it off with one more take down!" the boy ordered confidently.

    "C'mon, Flare, dodge!" Flare managed to get on his feet in time to move to the side, sending the Aron crashing into the tree behind him. The wood split around his head. "Great! Flamethrower!"

    From barely a foot away, the Flareon shot a white-hot burst into the steel pokemon. The wood around it caught fire. The Aron managed to pull free easily and back away from the flames, but it had a burn on one side of its head and was moving unsteadily on its four pointed legs. Flare hit it with another ember, and it fainted.

    "Return. Go, Sunspot!" A second Flareon materialized.

    Lucki pulled a new pokeball off her belt. "Flare, return," she commanded. "Go, Silver!"

    "Quick attack!"

    "Water gun!"

    The Flareon powered through the blasting water to hit Silver. She was knocked back, off her feet. She stood again and sent another water gun burst into the fire type's side. It yelped and scrambled back.

    "Headbutt!"

    The flame pokemon lowered its head and charged as Lucki called quickly, "Bubble! Slow it down!"

    Silver spewed out a thick froth. It stuck to the Flareon but the charging pokemon had too much momentum to be slowed. The eevee evolution barreled on to headbutt Silver in the chest.

    "Ow!" she yelled, hitting the ground again.

    "Keep using bubble!"

    Silver inhaled deeply, then sent out a huge torrent of the tiny bubbles, enough to coat and cover the opposing pokemon. Under the mass, the Flareon struggled weakly, blinded and encumbered.

    "All right! Good going Silver, now pound it with another water gun!"

    She hit the fire type headfirst with another blast, clearing away the bubbles around its head and torso so that the foam only remained around its legs. Still, that would prevent it from attacking by charging her.

    "Flamethrower!" shouted Otto.

    "Water gun!" Lucki countered sharply.

    But Silver stared, looking frozen, at the flames coming at her, then popped into her shell. When the attack faded she had fainted.

    Lucki groaned. She rushed over to Silver and sprayed a potion over the minor burns as Silver woke up.

    "Silver, why didn't you do what I said? We would've won."

    "I-I''m sorry, I just..." Silver looked down. "Panicked," she whispered. "I'll do better, I promise."

    Lucki turned to Otto. "Good battle," she told him, recalling Silver.

    "You too."

    Lucki checked her watch. She decided to start back. By the time she reentered Fortree, healed her pokemon and picked up her necklace, the gym should be ready.

    She made it back there to the Pokemon Center without running into Kecleon at any point, so it seemed they'd been successful at removing the annoying pests. Her pokemon healed, she went to the jeweler, who had her fixed necklace.

    "The chain is completely repaired," he told her, "but that doesn't mean it won't break again. You might want to reconsider wearing it while you're walking around in the wild."

    "Okay, thanks," Lucki replied. She put the necklace into a pocket on her bag instead of over her neck, paid him, and exited, continuing on her way to the gym.

    "Hey! Lucki!" shouted a familiar voice. Lucki turned to see Violet hurrying toward her, a blonde-haired girl in tow. "It's great to see you. Oh, this is Sapphire," she introduced.

    The blonde girl smiled. "Hello, it's nice to meet you." She had light brown, toffee colored eyes.

    "So, how are you doing?" Violet asked.

    "Well, this gym will be my fourth badge." Lucki gestured to her belt. "And I just caught my fifth pokemon yesterday."

    "Really? Cool. I've only got three pokemon so far. I've gotten five badges, though. What's your team? I got a Bagon and Seadra."

    "A Flareon, Manectric, Tropius and Absol."

    "Oh, an Absol?" repeated Sapphire. "Those are so cool. There are some around here?"

    "Yeah, I caught it over on Route 120."

    "Well," Violet stated, "we shouldn't keep you from your badge any longer. Good luck!"

    "Thanks," Lucki replied. "Bye!"

    "Bye!" Lucki headed further and climbed down the ladder. She didn't run, just in case there was one last Kecleon hanging around. But if there was, it got out of her way, and she got to the door without incident.

    The sign was gone and Lucki pushed the door open. It was plainly decorated in grays and light browns, but the ceiling was amazingly high, with a smooth, beam-less curve that looked like it must have been expensive to build. She walked through the mazelike corridors for a bit before coming to a woman who could only be Winona.

    She was wearing a heavy blue outfit that covered her whole body. She had a pair of light blue, almost white bagged pants, the hems long enough to drape over her blue shoes, a longsleeved shirt that was the same color except for two brighter blue bands around each arm just past the shoulder. Over these she had a sleeveless blue sweater that was long enough to reach past her hips, almost as far as Roxanne's dress. Her hands were also covered by a pair of blue gloves and she had a blue chocker around her neck. On top of her head was a modified version of an aviation hat, blue like the rest of her outfit with a set of flying goggles. Her purple hair flared out on either side at her temple, and Lucki could see that the rest of her hair hung loose behind her, a bit longer than the bottom of her sweater.

    "You have five pokemon," Winona observed. "Then we may battle with five pokemon each."

    Lucki nodded in agreement.

    Winona threw a pokeball forward. It burst over the marked arena area, and a small blue pokemon around a foot in size appeared in midair, looking like it had two plumes of white cloud on either side.

    Lucki knew gym leaders often started off with a weaker pokemon, and the fact this was unevolved meant that was probably true this time. She considered and picked the Absol's pokeball. She hadn't had a chance to practice battle with the Absol yet – or even name her, Lucki thought a trifle guiltily – so it was best to use her now, when it wouldn't cost her the match if something went wrong. "Go!"

    The Absol materialized sitting. She looked calmly over her shoulder at Lucki, then forward again.

    "Absol, use bite!"

    "Fury attack!"

    Before the diminutive blue bird pokemon could execute the attack, the Absol leaped at the Swablu, swiping it from the air with one oversized paw. It went careening into the ground, bloody scratches across its chest, and lay there twitching with crumpled wings.

    "Great job, Absol!" Lucki called encouragingly as Winona recalled the fainted cotton bird. The Absol gave no sign she heard Lucki, walking calmly to the left, off the arena floor and out of bounds. Disqualified.

    Lucki groaned.

    She recalled the dark type as Winona released a Tropius.

    "Go, Flare," Lucki decided.

    "Body slam!"

    "Dodge, quick!"

    The Tropius lowered its head and charged. Flare rolled out of the way as Winona called, "Stomp!" The grass pokemon reared up sharply, then struck Flare hard with one thick leg, pinning him.

    "Ember!"

    Still pinned, Flare shot a ball of flame directly into the underbelly of the Tropius. It let out a cry and twisted to get out of the scourching heat, landing heavily on one side. Flare scrambled up, freed.

    "Flamethrower!"

    While the Tropius was still struggling to get back on its feet, Flare hit it again, the flames engulfing half its body a moment.

    "Earthquake!"

    The Tropius struck the ground with its forelegs. A second later the ground under Flare trembled, then shot upward. Flare's legs crumpled under him. He started to get up and half fell again.

    "Another earthquake!"

    The ground hit him again, tossing him several feet like ragdoll. He managed to get to his feet, moving unsteadily.

    "C'mon, Flare, you've got the advantage! Use flamethrower again!"

    "Fly!"

    Flare inhaled, but the Tropius had jumped upward as its wings began to beat, allowing it to become airborne a second before the stream of fire would have hit. It zoomed up to hover near the ceiling.

    "See if you can hit it, Flare!" Lucki told him.

    Flare shot another flamethrower upward, but the flames flickered out well before reaching the grass-flying pokemon. He tried throwing an ember attack upward, but the ball of fire guttered out along the way, dissipating barely three-fourths of the way there. Lucki sighed. I guess he's not strong enough.

    The Tropius dropped suddenly, executing the second half of the move. "Flare, use flamethrower, quick!" Lucki called, but he wasn't fast enough to manage before the Tropius hit him headfirst, sending him tumbling almost out of the arena himself. He pushed himself halfway up with his forelegs and sent out a white blast of flame into the Tropius. Its chest blackened and the wings on one side shriveled up. The grass type let out a cry and crumpled to the ground.

    "Return," Winona announced. She threw out a new pokeball. The pokemon that appeared was vaguely hatchet-shaped and looked almost like its whole body was its head, somewhat reminiscent of the Nosepass Lucki had fought back in Rustboro in Roxanne's gym. It had a massive yellow beak that took up easily half its size including its wings, taking up the area where its stomach should have been and and running all the way to its tail. The small amount of its body that wasn't beak was white, with a small raise for its forehead where its large black eyes were placed. The front of that area was covered in a blue streak, but the sides were white as well. It had two odd wings that looked almost like arms or flippers, narrow things that ended in a set of thick, clearly defined blue feathers that gave it the optical illusion of having fingers at first glance.

    Pelipper were water types. Lucki recalled Flare. She considered. Raiden was the obvious choice, but he'd have the advantage here for the rest too, and she would probably be using her whole team in this battle. "Go, Saurius! Razor leaf!"

    "Deflect it with a gust attack!"

    Saurius beat his wings once, sending dozens of small green leaves shooting at the water type. The Pelipper beat its own wings several times, sending hard gusts of wind toward its opponent and the attack. The leaves were blown aside and the rushing air collided with Saurius, who bent under the driving wind.

    "Magical leaf!" Lucki called.

    He beat his wings again, this time releasing leaves that sparkled slightly in the air as they bore down on the Pelipper.

    "Blow it away again!" Winona ordered confidently. The Pelipper sent another series of gusts into the attack, but the hurtling leaves were unaffected, shooting through the air currents to pelt the water pokemon, which flinched under the barrage.

    "Wing attack, then!"

    "Headbutt!"

    The Pelipper swooped in to hit Saurius, only for the long-necked pokemon to strike it hard with his head. The water bird pokemon landed, momentarily stunned.

    "Great! Leech seed!"

    Saurius opened his mouth, spitting out several large seeds that landed on the dazed Pelipper and sprouted, digging their roots into its body. They glowed a gentle green as they began absorbing energy.

    "Pelipper, snap out of it and use ice beam!"

    "Quick, fly!"

    Saurius' wings began to beat. The Pelipper didn't react immediately to the order, giving him just enough time to lift off.

    But Winona reacted instantly. "Now, twister!"

    The Pelipper began beating its paddle-shaped wings again, forming a tightly packed cyclone of furiously swirling air. With a final strike of its wings it released the twister attack, sending it spinning into Saurius, who let out a startled cry as he was pulled in and spun around for almost a minute, before being tossed out to slam into the ground. He was clearly beaten. Lucki recalled him. Raiden it was then. "Go!"

    "Ice beam! Try to freeze it!" shouted Winona.

    "Dodge! Spark!" Lucki countered.

    Raiden jumped out of the way of the energy beam, electric current gathering and arcing over his body. Landing he tossed the cloud of electricity into the water-flying pokemon, who spasmed, letting out a loud squawk.

    "Blizzard!"

    The water type beat its wings sharply, daggers of ice materializing in the air and shooting forward into Raiden. He yelped, tumbling back as they pelted him.

    "Another spark!"

    "Try to dodge!"

    The Pelipper started to move, but then shuddered as the seeds entangling it glowed, sucking up more energy. While it was distracted, Raiden sent another ball of electricity into it. The water bird let out another cry and collapsed, paralyzed.

    "Go!" called Winona, recalling the water bird pokemon and sending out Lucki's next opponent.

    The new pokemon was huge in comparison to the Pelipper, easily a foot and a half larger and with a far greater wingspan. It was far different in other ways as well. It was steel colored except for red on the underside of its wings, with the rest of its body being a mix of light and dark gray plates. The large "feathers" of those wings, four of which made up each one, looked like flat knives and had pointed tips. Its head was similarly pointed, with a sharp beak tip and a swoop on its head resembling a shark's fin. Its talons were slightly triangular, with each corner looking like a knife's edge, and the tips of the talons were slightly hooked. Sinister red eyes under heavy gray brows completed the intimidating picture.

    "Return!" Lucki decided, holding out Raiden's pokeball. Flare would have the advantage here too, and Raiden was better kept in reserve for whatever Winona's final pokemon was. "Go Flare! Flamethrower!"

    Flare reacted quickly, sending out the attack before Winona could give a counter order. The flames rushed over the Skarmory's body, spraying outward at the sides.

    "Swift!" The Skarmory opened its mouth with a raucous cry, sending out a flurry of tiny white glowing stars. Flare cringed as they struck him. "Rock slide!"

    Skarmory can use that?

    The steel type focused, then flared out its wings with another cry. Rocks fell from the ceiling, burying Flare. The pile quivered as he began to struggle his way out. The Skarmory beat its wings, taking to the air just long enough to land next to the mound of stones. When Flare dragged himself out, it pecked him immediately, driving its long beak into his shoulder. He let out a cry.

    Winona called, "Bury him again!" The armor bird flared its wings a second time and hopped backward as a second time. Rocks fell on top of him. Seconds passed as he struggled underneath. When he appeared again, Winona responded with, "Wing attack."

    "Flamethrower!"

    Flare sent out another blast of searing flame. When the attack cleared, the Skarmory flew closer and hit him with one extended steel wing hard enough for Lucki to hear across the room, and Flare crumpled. She recalled him. I was hoping he'd last longer... she thought ruefully, sending out Raiden again.

    "Spark, Raiden!" Sparks began gathering and arcing over the Manectric's body.

    "Steel wing!" Before Raiden could released the attack, the Skarmory flew at him, a sudden white glow running over its wings as energy gathered for the move. It struck him along the side with one wing as he shoved the electric cloud into its body, both pokemon shouting as the attacks hit. Raiden didn't look much worse for wear, but the Skarmory was clearly on its last legs, barely remaining upright.

    "Finish it off with a thundershock, Raiden!" Lucki called confidently. Raiden barked, sending the energy arcing off him and into the flying type, who fainted.

    Winona was down to her last pokemon now. Lucki was starting to feel like things were going well.

    "Go!" shouted the gym leader, hurling the pokeball out.

    Like Winona's first pokemon, it was blue and white, although it was around three times larger and rather than distinct wings its body was wrapped in what looked like a cloud. Two small feet poked out at the bottom and trailing blue tailfeathers could be seen as well. A long swan's neck lifted its head above the white fluff.

    Altaria. Part dragon type, Raiden wouldn't have the advantage he normally would against a flying type. Still, his electric attacks would work. "Use quick attack, then spark!"

    Raiden blurred as he raced forward, electricity gathering. He struck the smaller pokemon, discharging the lightning at the same time.

    "Fury attack!"

    Before Raiden could attempt to withdraw out of range, the dragon type pecked sharply at this face and chest several times, making him flinch under the blows.

    "Earthquake!"

    The Altaria rapped the ground with one foot, and it rumbled under Raiden's feet before jumping upward, hard, sending the discharge pokemon flying. He didn't get back up and Lucki recalled him.

    "Silver!" she shouted, releasing her starter. "Water gun!"

    Silver shot a torrent of water into the humming pokemon, knocking it out of the air for a moment. It promptly bounced back up, hovering as it waited for the next order.

    "Dragonbreath!"

    "Silver, use mirror coat!"

    The dragon type inhaled and sent out a stream of blue fire, hitting Silver, who had begun to shine faintly. A second later an answering blast shot into the Altaria.

    "Take down!"

    It swooped forward, hitting the small Squirtle hard and sending her tumbling. She got back up stiffly.

    "Again!"

    "Bubble, weight it down!"

    Silver breathed in and then shot out a foam into the approaching pokemon, covering it in another layer of white, then ducked at the last second. Unbalanced by the water covering its body, the attack narrowly missed.

    "Use dragon dance to clear it off!"

    The Altaria let out a sharp, clear cry like a small bell, then began to swoop in a tight, weaving loop. The bubbly foam was stripped off by the air.

    "Earthquake!"

    "Water gun!"

    Silver blasted it as it darted down to rap the ground again. She let out a cry as the ground shuddered and struck her, interrupting her attack. Seemingly stunned, she didn't get up immediately.

    "Solar beam!"

    The Altaria let out another ringing cry. Greenish golden energy began gathering about its body. It built into a semi-translucent ball just in front of its head.

    "Silver, get up!"

    The tiny turtle was just barely pushing herself upright when the move completed. The Altaria threw the ball straight forward. Silver yelled as the blast hit, knocking her backwards to roll over the ground.

    "Finish it off with dragon claw!"

    The Altaria slashed its talons across Silver, scoring deep into one arm. Lucki stared in shock as bright red blood welled up, stark against the Squirtle's gray skin. Silver opened her mouth and shot a glowing ice beam into her opponent.

    Lucki rushed over as Winora recalled the dragon type. "Silver are you okay," she started to say, reaching for her pokemon.

    "Don't touch me!" Silver screamed, jerking away before Lucki could touch her, her own voice half-drowning the translator. She stared at Lucki with the desperate, panicked eyes of something trapped.

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    whoa, what's with Silver? learning ice beam at the last second paid off, but what's gonna happen to Lucki's starter now?

    Quite a high speed gym battle, though i'll have to scrutinize to find any spelling errors. Good chapter, really is. well, gotta run. be back to edit.

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    Nice fic, took a while to catch up ^__^

    I liked this chapter, though I noticed only one mistake:

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    They agreed on 1-on-1, but it was 2-on-2.
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    My, that Winona is full of surprises, isn't she? Teaching her team attacks to shore up their weaknesses certainly made for an interesting battle. It did seem a little on the short side for a 5-on-5 battle, but that may be because my own battles are drawn out (sometimes I think I'm giving my Pokemon too much durability )

    "Winora said that should be open in an hour or two."
    Whoops, misspelled Winona's name!

    Also, about Aron... are they spots or holes in its armor? I have a battle in my fic where Nidorino jabs its horn into a hole and then flings Aron around like a ragdoll.

    Squirtle learning Ice Beam does seem a bit "deus ex machina" (plot twist happening unexpectedly seemingly favoring the main character) but perhaps you can use the aftermath of the battle to explain its sudden use of the attack.

    Also, I sometimes got confused as to who was issuing commands during the battle. Every so often, you'll want to include things like, "Use Sky Attack!" commanded Winona as she pointed at her opponent, a determined look on her face" or "Panicked, Lucki screamed, "Quick, avoid that attack!" You do this in the battle, but I think it wouldn't hurt to include them a bit more often (but not after every attack, maybe every third attack.)

    But these are relatively minor quibbles. Overall, this was a good, solid chapter, with a pretty intense gym battle. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

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    Ah, so exciting!


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    I enjoyed this chapter a lot
    Winona's battle was not good for Lucki

    Absol wins but is disqualified right after. 1-1
    Flare wins against a pokemon it has a type advantage over but then loses against a pokemon it has a type advantage over. 2-2
    Saurius lost against a pokemon it has a type advantage over. 2-3
    Raiden beat Skarmory but lost against Altaria. 3-4
    Silver beat Alteria with a newly learned move but hates Lucki now. 4-4

    Isn't that a tie or do you not count disqualifications as points.
    Anyway Lucki wasn't very lucky in this episode was she.
    I hope Silver doesn't hate her forever
    I can't wait for the next chapter
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    Beast is Holy, DarkPersian479, thanks for finding those mistakes, I've fixed them.

    Also, about Aron... are they spots or holes in its armor?
    Dunno. Pokemon art is kind of bad with details. It's great for getting a general idea, but then you think something like that and go stare at the picture for five hours and wind up still having no idea.

    And I'll be sure to use more speech tags during battles.

    shadowlight, you'd have a good point 'cept you forgot about the second half of Pelipper's battle. The battle was five on five not four on four.

    Absol beat Swablu but was disqualified. 1:1
    Flare beat Tropius 1:2
    Saurius lost to Pelipper 2:2
    Raiden beat Pelipper 2:3
    Flare lost to Skarmory 3:3
    Raiden beat Skarmory 3:4
    Raiden lost to Altaria 4:4
    Silver beat Altaria 4:5

    Anyway Lucki wasn't very lucky in this episode was she.
    True. But then, she wasn't exactly unlucky either...

    Well, you'll see.

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    Ack, late late late…Sorry about not realizing sooner that you’d updated… ^^;;;

    Poor Silver. =( I wonder what’s going on with her? At any rate, that’s a nice bit of character development there. =)

    Highlights and et cetera:

    But Silver stared, looking frozen, at the flames coming at her, then popped into her shell. When the attack faded she had fainted.

    Lucki groaned. She rushed over to Silver and sprayed a potion over the minor burns as Silver woke up.

    "Silver, why didn't you do what I said? We would've won."

    "I-I''m sorry, I just..." Silver looked down. "Panicked," she whispered. "I'll do better, I promise."
    Aww. That makes me want to hug the little turtle…

    The new pokemon was huge in comparison to the Pelipper, easily a foot and a half larger and with a far greater wingspan. It was far different in other ways as well. It was steel colored except for red on the underside of its wings, with the rest of its body being a mix of light and dark gray plates. The large "feathers" of those wings, four of which made up each one, looked like flat knives and had pointed tips. Its head was similarly pointed, with a sharp beak tip and a swoop on its head resembling a shark's fin. Its talons were slightly triangular, with each corner looking like a knife's edge, and the tips of the talons were slightly hooked. Sinister red eyes under heavy gray brows completed the intimidating picture.
    Skarmory!!! =D I knew I’d be seeing one in the vs. Winona fight, but it was still really cool when Skarmory appeared. I just love those things. ^^

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    Whee...this is chapter is so horribly late. Next chapter should be sooner, yeah...

    Sike Saner, as to what's up with Silver, this chapter......won't resolve much. Oh well, next chapter! Glad you're interested.

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    Chapter Fifteen - Getting to Know One Another


    Back at the Pokecenter, Lucki chatted with Vi and Sapphire while waiting for her pokemon to be healed by Nurse Joy.

    "So how'd you get your name?" Lucki asked Sapphire.

    The brown-eyed girl giggled, sounding half amused and half embarrassed. "Well, I had bright blue eyes when I was born, and with my hair and all," she explained, twisting a lock between her fingers, "my parents figured I'd stay blonde and blue eyed, but instead my eyes got dark after a week or two." She nodded to Violet. "Probably they should have named me Goldy instead."

    "Lucki!" called Nurse Joy. "Your pokemon are healed!" Lucki said goodbye and headed up to the counter to retrieve her pokemon.

    "Um, they're all okay, right? My Squirtle's arm was cut in my gym battle..."

    "It's fine, that's what Pokemon Centers are for."

    "Oh, okay. Thanks!"

    Lucki headed out of the Pokecenter, heading west again. She released Silver.

    "Are you okay now?" she asked.

    Silver nodded. "...yeah. Sorry."

    "What happened?"

    "Sorry," Silver repeated. "It was just that I..." She trailed off.

    "That your arm hurt? Don't worry, it's okay," Lucki told her.

    Silver nodded again, slowly, touching her healed arm.

    The two continued on and shortly were back on Route 120.

    Maybe we could use a break, she thought. Give the Absol some time to get used to them. They could probably use some training, too. Flare hadn't done as well as she'd hoped in the last gym battle.

    And I need to give the Absol a name. Maybe Abby?

    Lucki's stomach rumbled. Looking at her watch, she realized it was about one-thirty and she hadn't eaten lunch yet. A break definitely seemed a good idea.

    She continued walking for another ten minutes, until she came to a suitable clearing. She stopped there, cleared an area for a small fire and gathered wood. Her stomach rumbled again and she ate a snack from her bag to tide her over, then finished setting up. It was still somewhat chilly so she set a pot over the firepit to cook soup, filling it with water from her canteen, then released her pokemon.

    The Absol looked about slowly, then lay down where she had materialized.

    "She caught you?" remarked Flare, sounding surprised.

    "Yeah you didn't know?" Raiden replied. "I did it!"

    "Of course you did," Flare commented.

    "Caught who? Who are you?" Silver asked.

    "Flare, you can talk in a sec. First, use ember to light the wood, kay?"

    "Oh. Sorry." Flare turned and let out a weak ember. The wood caught and blazed up immediately.

    "Okay, that's done," Lucki remarked to herself. "Next item. So Absol, you need a name. How about-"

    "I have a name," the Absol said, raising her head and looking at Lucki coolly.

    Lucki hadn't been expecting that. "Oh, what?"

    "Fara."

    "Okay," Lucki responded. For some reason, she'd been expecting something longer and more eloquent. "Then that'll be your name."

    The Absol did not reply, lying back down.

    "Anyway, guys, I decided we could use a break, so you can just hang out today."

    "Cool!" barked Raiden, jumping up and down. He took off, running about and jumping from stone to stone.

    "And Absol – Fara – is our newest teammate, so make her feel welcome!" Lucki added. I hope the others can convince Fara, she still seems pretty unsure about belonging to me.

    She headed off to get more wood while the soup heated, leaving her pokemon to walk among themselves.

    When she got back Silver was practicing hitting things with her water gun. Flare was walking about, sniffing the camp area and looking around. The Absol was where she'd been when Lucki left, and Raiden was still bounding about. She wondered if they'd tried to talk to the Absol or not.

    ***

    Flare had lain down, not exactly close to Lucki but not far either, and on the opposite side from the Absol. Lucki was finishing up her soup.

    Raiden walked somewhat hesitantly toward Flare. "Um, wanna play?" he asked.

    Flare's eyes didn't open. "No."

    "Flare!" Lucki chastised. "You shouldn't sit around and sulk all day. It'd be good exercise. You could use some running practice, you know."

    "Sorry," Flare apologized, sounding sincere. He stood up and followed Raiden, whose tail was wagging happily.

    Lucki headed over to Silver, who was resting, looking tired, a little way off. "How are you?"

    "I think I'm getting better," Silver replied quietly.

    "Uh, about what I said about talking to the Absol. Have you?"

    "We kind of, I said hi and stuff, but she's kind of..." Silver trailed off. "Imposing, I guess. And it seemed like I should wait until she wasn't resting to talk. Sorry."

    "It's okay, just make sure you do talk to her. Make her feel welcome. It's like all of you are avoiding her right now," Lucki told Silver.

    Silver nodded. "I will."

    By late afternoon, the Absol was sitting calmly, although it wasn't clear if she was watching or meditating or lost in thought. It started to get darker and the pokemon formed a loose ring near the fire while Lucki got out her sleeping bag. They started talking to one another, and with the Absol.

    "She's really a very nice person," volunteered Silver as Lucki lay down. "You'll like her once you get to know her. It might seem scary at first, but it's not really once you get used to it."

    "If you felt it was scary," the Absol said in her beautiful alien voice, "then it was, wasn't it?"

    "I guess, but," Silver half stammered, sounding uncertain, "I mean, once you...It's not really, I just thought it was...I just was, at first...It's not as bad as it seems, at first..."

    Saurius spoke up as Silver trailed off. "Lucki is a good trainer," he asserted, and explained how she had helped him. "I joined her of my own choice. She's not cruel, and she knows what she's doing. She is a good person."

    "Yes," Flare agreed emphatically.

    "Yeah! She plays with me sometimes," Raiden told the Absol, "and she helped me learn all sorts of new moves and ways of fighting so I can win."

    Lucki closed her eyes and started to drift off to sleep. She thought she heard the Absol say, "And what about you?" but she wasn't sure what it meant or who it was said to, or even if it was said at all.

    When she woke the next morning she saw the fire had died out during the night. Her pokemon and items were all still there though, making a marked improvement over the last time she'd slept outside. The Absol was awake already. Lucki yawned and started to break down the camp. It didn't take her long to have everything packed up. She recalled her pokemon and headed out.

    She hadn't been walking long before she ran into another trainer, a boy about her age but almost a head shorter than her, with brown hair and brownish-blue eyes. "Hi," she introduced. "I'm Lucki. Want to battle?"

    "Sure," he replied. "I'm Jery."

    "Okay. How about one on one?"

    "Sure," he replied again.

    Lucki sent out Flare.

    The boy considered, then picked a greatball and tossed it forward. A round pokemon appeared. Its back and the top half of its face to its upper jaw were blue, barring a handful of white spots on its back, all the way to its small tail. Its lower jaw and underside were solid white, reaching back to a bit after its two small flippers that it used to hold itself steady.

    Spheal. It's a water type, but it's part ice, too, Lucki thought quickly. So Flare isn't at as much of a disadvantage as it seems. And Spheal is only the first stage, too.

    "Water sport!" Jery called. The round pokemon tilted its head up, shooting a fountain of water into the air, coating itself. It then spun around on the ground, so that the fountain sprayed everywhere. Flare yelped and jumped back at the droplets.

    Cool. I wonder if Silver can learn that?

    Within thirty seconds, the battle area was saturated. Flare was dancing about, trying not to step in the soggy grass. "Flare, it's only a little water," Lucki called. "Focus!"

    "Water gun!" The Spheal inhaled, rocking back, then aimed at Flare and shot out a burst of water. Flare jumped to the side, avoiding it, then slipped on the grass and scrabbled to stay upright, barely catching his balance.

    "Flamethrower!"

    Flare breathed in sharply, then shot red and yellow flames from his mouth, covering the Spheal so that it was completely obscured. When the attack ended, Lucki saw that the Spheal seemed dazed, and steam was rising from its body and the ground around it.

    "All right Flare, take down!"

    The fire type charged, slamming headfirst into the Spheal's body. The force knocked it back, but Flare bounced off it as well.

    "Mud slap!" Before Flare could recover, the Spheal spun around, sending up a wave of mud that collided with the flame pokemon, coating the fur on his head and chest with mud. "Now, rollout!"

    The Spheal began to spin again, but this time rather than spinning like a top with a single point staying against the ground, it rolled like a wheel, skidding a moment as it picked up traction, then starting toward Flare, who was pawing at the mud in his eyes. It hit him headfirst, sending him flying to smack back into the ground a moment later. He stumbled blindly to his feet, turning about desperately to try to figure out where the next attack would come, only to be struck heavily in the side and sent skidding through the muddy grass. He got up again, only to be hit again and knocked down.

    "Focus!" called Lucki again. "Listen for it coming, and once it hits, try to get it with flamethrower!"

    Flare stilled a bit, shaking his head to try to dislodge the mud from his eyes and ears. The Spheal came at him again and he tried to jump to the side. The blow still hit but it was more glancing and he remained standing. It was hard enough, though, to disorient him and he sent out a wild flamethrower that was nowhere near the Spheal.

    "Flare, come on! You can do it!" shouted Lucki.

    The Flareon braced himself as the Spheal prepared for another attack. He stood still, listening. He tried to move aside at the last second, breathing in, and when the Spheal hit he twisted his head in the direction of the blow and exhaled a blast of flame, breaking the spin.

    While the water type was still dazed, Lucki shouted, "Quick! Take down!"

    Flare shook his head, stumbling backwards. He pawed at his face.

    "Hurry up!" Lucki shouted.

    Jery saw that his Spheal was no longer dazed and called, "Water gun!"

    The Spheal inhaled quickly and sent another torrent of water into Flare, who let out a choking yelp and was knocked off his feet.

    "Come on!" Lucki shouted again, frustrated. "Take down!"

    The fire type scrabbled to his feet and charged, kicking up mud as his paws dug into the wet ground, and hit the water/ice type directly. Its round body rolled across the grass at a slower spin than during its rollout attack until it collided with one of the trees nearby.

    "Return," announced Jery, seeing it was unconscious. The Spheal turned red and was sucked back into the pokeball.

    Flare watched this, then slumped down into the mud, barely conscious himself. Jery laughed, surprised. "That was close."

    Lucki laughed as well, although she blushed in embarrassment. "Flare, you're making me look bad," she chided, heading over to give him a potion.

    "...sorry," he responded, his voice distant or perhaps dazed.

    Lucki recalled him. She started to continue, skidding a bit in the mud and almost falling. She walked carefully until she was clear of the battle area, then sped up, her strides larger and more confident.

    It was a beautiful day, Lucki reflected. The sun was shining brightly, warming the air to a comfortable temperature for walking and no further, and the sky was nearly clear, with only a few fluffy clouds drifting in the blue to break up the expanse. Now that she was past the wet battle area, the ground was dry and firm, making for easy walking.

    She didn't meet any other trainers along the way, and aside from a quick battle with a challenging Linoone, who Silver took out easily, there were no other interruptions. Before long, lunchtime had arrived and Lucki decided to stop and set up for a meal. She released her pokemon so they could stretch their legs while she prepared some food. Then she realized her canteen was nearly empty and headed off to find a stream to refill it.

    "...want me," Flare was saying to the Absol when she got back, voice muted.

    "It was never your failing, so of course you cannot fix it," the Absol said in her golden voice. It was so clear and undoubting Lucki felt, hearing it, that whatever it was, it must be true.

    "Hi guys," Lucki called as she approached. Flare jumped up, tail raised momentarily. "Making friends?" She looked at the Absol. "You see, I'm not so bad after all." Flare's tail had dipped back to its normal position.

    "You have made your choice," said the Absol in the same certain voice. "You have no need to make attempts at convincing me; I shall remain until the end."

    "Um...okay..." Lucki responded, not sure what to make of this.

    She ate quickly, wanting to be on her way. There was a waystation for trainers to rest at further along the route, and she was hoping to get there before dark. Sleeping outside was fine on an occasional basis but she'd rather sleep in a bed tonight. Especially if it wound up raining. The few clouds earlier in the morning had started gathering friends, and the western half of the sky was now covered with them. She walked briskly.

    It got darker, both from the sun dipping closer and closer to the horizon and the clouds reaching further across the sky. Lucki was starting to worry she wouldn't find the waystation, but she rounded a curve in the road and saw it off in the distance.

    Finally! Lucki sped up a little, hurrying toward the older wooden building.

    Inside Lucki found other trainers lounging in a common room just beyond the front desk, pokemon splayed out around them. She signed her name for a room, was told there'd be food ready in a half hour, and headed over to chat with the others. She released her five pokemon as she entered. Without a Pokecenter healing machine, the next best thing was just giving them time out to recover their strength.

    Perhaps ten or fifteen minutes passed. One of the other trainers got a call on her cell phone. "What? Wow! Really? Where? Okay!" she snapped it shut and turned to the trainer closest to the remote. "Hey, turn on the TV! Channel five!" The boy grabbed the remote and did so. Lucki, like everyone, looked to the glowing screen, curious what this was all about.

    "...report has been verified. Team Magma appeared in the Route 119 area earlier today, poaching the Tropius herds as well as assorted other wild pokemon. This is their second reported appearance in the area in the past few days," the newswoman stated.

    A quiet, deep cry came from Lucki's right, like the low groan of a tree. Lucki looked toward it.

    "Saurius?"

    He turned his long neck slowly to regard her. After a moment, sounding as if he was speaking from a great depth, he said in a calm, slow voice, almost as if to himself, "Why did I leave with you?" There was no accusation, no anger, just a distant sad bafflement. "Why did I leave?"

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    About time icemew! Let's get to it!

    no real errors here... the only part i saw with a problem was

    The boy considered, then picked a greatball and tossed it forward
    Great Ball are two words... not one.

    other than that, a short and very sweet chapter! Poor Saurius, i wonder what'll happen? only thing to do is wait.

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    I’m really liking Fara as a character. And I like her name, too. I have to say, I’m glad she didn’t end up being called Abby…

    The ending was my favorite part of the chapter…it was just so potent. Now it’s Saurius to whom I feel like giving a hug… ;-;

    Other highlights and et cetera:

    "If you felt it was scary," the Absol said in her beautiful alien voice, "then it was, wasn't it?"
    “Her beautiful alien voice”. I love the way you spoke of her voice there. ^^

    The few clouds earlier in the morning had started gathering friends, and the western half of the sky was now covered with them.
    There’s another phrase I like: “The few clouds earlier in the morning had started gathering friends” ^^

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