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    DISCLAIMER: I DO NOT own the characters or the plotline. Characters are copyright of Nintendo/Game Freak/Creatures. Bill Watterson (creator of the "Calvin & Hobbes" comic series) is responsible for plotline. The only thing in this fic I own is the ending. Well, almost. The last 3 lines/sentences are Watterson's doing. I did the sappy part. =P

    RATING: PG

    A/N: I posted this fiction last year in January, but decided to repost it today. Note that I wrote it while I was still experimenting with my style, hence the lack of discription towards the characters.

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    “Today is Valentine’s Day.” said Brock to the young Pokemon Trainer ahead of him.

    “Ah, so that would explain the heart-shaped pancakes we had for breakfast.” muttered Ash Ketchum. His yellow electric Pokemon, Pikachu, was riding atop his trainer’s official Pokemon League ball cap.

    “Who’s your valentine this year?” asked the ex-Gym Leader/Pokemon Breeder.

    “Nobody.” replied Ash casually, and kept on walking.

    “Is it Misty?” asked Brock, grinning evilly.

    “No.” answered Ash, his temper raising slightly.

    “I bet she is! I’ll bet your heart beats faster at the sound of her name! Ahh, how you long to gaze into her shimmering eyes!” mused Brock.

    “WHAT?! That’s a lie!” cried Ash, which was partly true. He did have a slight crush on Misty, the red-haired girl who traveled with him on his Pokemon Journey.

    “Your cheeks are flushed!” raved Brock. “Your chin quivers to imagine her soft, warm lips pressed against yours! Oh, to be locked for eternity in a passionate embrace with sweet, sweet Misty!”

    “THAT”S IT!” cried Ash, lunging at his friend. Pikachu, who saw this coming, leapt off Ash’s hat onto the ground.

    “Can I be the best man?” asked Brock.

    “TAKE IT BACK!”

    “Have you picked out a ring yet?”

    “TAKE IT BACK!”

    “Where’s the honeymoon?”

    “TAKE IT BACK!”

    The two continued to fight until....

    “Hey, Ash!”

    “Huh?”

    It was Misty. She was standing there, with Togepi, the Egg Pokemon , in her arms, along with a bouquet of roses. She was smiling. “Thanks for the flowers.” She set Togepi down next to Pikachu. Then, she pulled Ash into a passionate kiss.

    “Happy Valentine’s Day, Ash.” she whispered.

    “Happy Valentine’s Day, Mist.” whispered back the trainer.

    “Oh HO-O-O! You sent her flowers?? Doctor Lover, paging Doctor I. M. N. Love!” laughed Brock, as Togepi and Pikachu cheered for their trainers’ new-found love.

    “I’d say we’re about due for another Saint Valentine’s Day massacre.” said Misty, pulling out her mallet.

    FIN
    Last edited by Cap D. Blue; 15th February 2006 at 4:57 AM.

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    Yay, first reviewer! =D

    XD! That was cute and funny, D-Kun!

    Loved it when Ash denied it. =D Sweetness. Go, Brock! XD

    Overall, it was very cute. I do wonder where Brock would run off to since Ash and Misty would chase him. XD

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    MM89: I knew you'd like it. After all, you are a fan of fics like these. Thanks for the review!

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    XD!! Oh smeg...that was hilarious! ^_^ Awesome job on it Riptide Dragon! ^^


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    Moogleborg: Thanks, although this is basically a PKMN version of the "Calvin & Hobbes" comic strip.

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    No problem, D-Kun! ^___^ It was really funny that I couldn't help but to burst out laughing. XD
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    I fail to understand why this fic is getting some good comments since it hasn’t much descriptions in it. You could’ve described more on where they were going, the scenery, the description of the characters, etc. There are so many things that you missed out. I suggest that you think up more descriptions the next time you write a fic.

    Although it was funny, I’m highly disappointed.

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    I finally review!

    I love one-shots that happen on 2/14, it may be short, but you did a very good job.

    10/10
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    THAT WAS SO ADORIBLE!
    Awww, I love when Brock gets pumbled into oblivion for messin' in people's feelings. Eh, but who can blame him? Great one shot!

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    I read this when you last posted it too. I think it's funny, I love all the jokes Brock makes. It's especially funny when Ash gets caught in the act. Needs more description as you said, but what the heck? I enjoyed it.
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    -gos all...um, funny-eyed?-
    TOO SHORT! But still, Brock was so funny when he teased Ash- XD Loved that part! But then again, how can Misty all of a sudden appear and then straight away they kissed? 0_0 They make no sense...but still...
    CUTE!
    I mean, just because of a bunch of flowers and then...-blinks eyes twice-
    CUTE! CUTE! CUTE! I loved Brock the most, though.
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