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    This is a MayxDrew fic, rated G. I'm supposed to work on chapter 3 of 'A Rival Then A...' but I'm too lazy to do so XP Besides, this idea came to me...5 minutes ago XD Whatever, this is a one-shot fic and the italics are May thoughts.

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    He smiles whenever he looks at me

    May smiled as she talked to Ash, Max and Brock, though she knew Drew was near her, looking at her.

    He always says I’m a bad coordinator

    May argued back at Drew, for calling her a bad coordinator, and clearly saw that Drew was enjoying this quarrel.

    He gives me roses and claims its for Beautifly

    May got a rose from Drew as he continued to say that she did a good job, but needed extra training.

    He spies on me in jealousy

    May greeted Harley, as Harley had been her good friend ever since he decided to mend his ways, Harley and May had a chat, with Drew spying at them in jealousy.

    Sometimes, I can’t help but wonder,
    Is he in love with me?


    Drew called out to May before she left; as he said she did a great job today, even though she didn’t win the ribbon. May blushed, flattered.

    He sometimes compliments me as I blush embarrassed.

    Drew threw May a rose, before he walked away. May grasped the rose in her hands, staring at him leaving, blushing a little.

    He always leaves me with a rose and confusion.

    May walked away, back to Ash, Max and Brock.

    My friends and family always tease me that I like him

    May blushed as she denied it when Ash, Max, Brock or her mother teased her that she liked Drew.

    Sometimes, I can’t help but wonder,
    Am I in love with him?


    May and her friends were traveling again, when they met Drew.

    I always meet him in pure coincidence, he say.
    But I know that he follows me everywhere.


    May and Drew started a argument again, that led towards a Pokémon battle.

    We always have quarrels, and he always enjoy them,
    I can just tell by the look on his face.


    May lost, in disappointment as she sadly returned her Pokémon and cried.

    I always lose to him, and he doesn’t look happy about it.

    Drew walked over to May, trying to comfort her as he gave her a rose.

    Another rose! Another rose! I always hope that they meant something.

    May wiped her tears away as she smiled at Drew, who told her she just needed more training.

    I always like how he says that, he just makes me feel better.

    Drew smiled at her back, saying he had to go and he’ll meet her again in the next contest.

    I sighed in disappointment, you always leave me.

    May said to Drew

    “I’ll miss you.”

    Drew sighed as he replied

    “Me too. And I expect you to be much stronger next time when I meet you, okay?”

    I agreed. Anything for you!

    You left with Roselia, walking beside you, as I saw the frown on your face, I shouted out

    “I’ll see you soon!”

    Drew turned around, as a smile replacing his frown. He turned around as he walked again, this time leaving for sure.

    I’m sure that I’m in love with you.
    But I sometimes can’t help wondering,
    Are you in love with me?


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    Kinda, short, don't you think? 2 pages on Micro Word... XP Well, the poem is made up by me, that's why it's so...so...stupid XD Anyway...great, I'm having more plots in my head now...-hits head- Cya!
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    You always reply to mine so here is my post to yours!
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    CUTE!!! That was really good! Keep it up and make it longer and you could end up posting these every week!

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    OOH!! This is good!! (Ignore any typos, I can't type today, I'm confloozed).
    MISTAKES: (All but one are minor)

    Major mistake:
    You left with Roselia, walking beside you, as I saw the frown on your face, I shouted out
    You changed it from 3rd person point of view (Using names instead of I and you and me) to 1st person point of view (Using I, me, you, we). XD (I've done it before, too)

    Minor mistakes:
    claims it for Beautifly
    its, not it. XD

    that leaded towards a Pokémon battle.
    Led, not leaded.

    Well, that's it. Kitteh luvs this one-shot!!! XD Kitteh out!

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    Okay...I reread the story and I DID changed it to the first person's view -slaps forehead- Well, I did it at night so...XP I was drowsy...and fell asleep on my keyboard XD My brother shook me up and I shut down the computer to go to sleep XD Gah, anyways, gotta change the mistakies! Great, I even spelled mistakes wrong today XP....Thanks for the reviews...though
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    There's something about your writing that makes it different from other people's, even though you could add some description for the sake of it.
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    There's something about your writing that makes it different from other people's, even though you could add some description for the sake of it.
    It's either me or...am I seeing your posts everywhere? Okay, I know that this one-shot had...very little description in it, but I couldn't think up of anything else.
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    You must have been in a rush or something? Well at least you got the ideas to the people that read it, since that's all that's important in the end as long as the thing is fun to read.
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    Oh, that was really cute. I liked it a lot. Though... you could improve on your description a bit... besides that I really liked it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by HarleyScarow View Post
    You must have been in a rush or something? Well at least you got the ideas to the people that read it, since that's all that's important in the end as long as the thing is fun to read.
    I love your poem! It has afew mistakes here and there, but other than that
    it was great!

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    Talking Great!

    Aww so cute! I was gonna tell you what was wrong with it, but others beat me to it...
    What they said is practically all that's wrong with it... I love how you used such descriptive words and backed it up ith real things that happened!
    Great fic, mine will also have contestshipping, along with Pokeshipping so, if you want you can check it out! Hero
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    Adorable! Like the good saying goes...short but sweet! Lovely one-shot Cecilia!

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    =ooo *gaspeh* Re-Reviewers?! [/shock moment

    XD;

    Originally Posted by HarleyScarow
    You must have been in a rush or something? Well at least you got the ideas to the people that read it, since that's all that's important in the end as long as the thing is fun to read.
    Actually, yeah, I was in a rush. O.o; I was randomly thinking up of a story when...I just realized I had to go to school. XD *shot*

    And XxM!istyxX, I'll check out your fic sometime. ^_____^ Arigatou for the review, though. =DDD

    CuteDrew, thanks for the review. <3~

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    Man! No Kissing?! Wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    XD Noo...

    Check my other fics. It probably has some blushing and a peck on the lips or two.<3

    Arigatou for the review...If that's a review. o.o; Please write a proper review next time, kay? [/sorryformini-modding._.
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