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    Talking Together At Last (AshxMisty One-Shot)

    How many more one-shots do I want to post? XD This is a one-shot Ash and Misty fic, rated PG-13, well, if you count the kiss Misty and Ash had. Anyway, just to say, this site REALLY lacks of Pokeshipping fics. I mean, there are only 2 or 3 or 4 or 5 or whatever. Now, let's start onto the story. Oh yeah, and it's from Misty's Point Of View

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    “Ash!” I cried happily, seeing Ash in the Pokémon Center. His friends seem to be leaving, murmering something about ‘Ash and Misty are in love’, while heading back to Pokémon Center rooms.

    “Misty!” He called back, and I could see him forming a smile.

    “It’s been a long time since I have seen you, how have you been?” I asked, curious to know what was happening.

    “I’m fine! Do you want me to tell you the details of what happened?” Ash said excitedly.
    “I won 10 matches today with Pikachu! All in one straight row!”

    “Wow!” I said, impressed. I knew he was happy and I felt happy for him too.

    “Hey Misty, do you want to get some ice-cream?” Ash asked.

    I heard his stomach growling as I and he broke in laughter.

    “Sure!” I said happily.

    I and Ash walked out of the Pokémon Center, and headed towards a ice cream shop. Ash walked forward to the ice cream shop owner and said

    “One Strawberry and Chocolate ice cream, please.”

    I smiled as I sat down on the nearest bench. He remembered I loved Strawberry flavor! He paid for the ice cream and walked towards me, holding out a Strawberry Flavored ice cream to me.

    “Thanks! You remembered!” I exclaimed happily.

    “Of course I’ll remember! Mist, you are my best friend and I’ll never forget anything about you!” Ash said, licking his ice cream.

    I smiled happily. He called me by my nickname! I loved him when he called me that name! I ate my Strawberry ice cream when I saw chocolate all over Ash’s mouth.

    “Ash! You have chocolate all over your mouth!” I said, laughing.

    “Let me clean that up!” Ash said, blushing in embarrassment.

    “Never mind, I’ll do it.” I said, taking out a napkin and wiping away the chocolate from his mouth.

    “Thanks, Mist. You are the best friend anyone could have.” Ash said.

    I smiled. If only I could be more then your best friend, though.

    As I and Ash smiled to each other, licking our ice cream, I was thinking of a romantic moment that would happen between me and Ash…

    Ash was wearing a handsome black suite, walking towards me.

    “Would you like to dance?” He asked.

    “Sure!” I replied.

    He held out a hand to me as I accept it and we walked over to the dance floor as we danced, smiling to each other. My blue gown swayed every time we turned. We stopped as he said

    “I love you.”

    I smiled with happiness as I replied

    “I love you too.”


    “Hey, Misty?” Ash said, waving his hand in front of Misty’s daydreaming eyes.

    “Misty?”

    I snapped out of my daydream.

    “Yes?” I asked.

    “Betcha can’t catch me!” Ash said, laughing as he ran.

    “I can! Just watch!” I said, laughing at his playfulness.

    We were enjoying ourselves and we didn’t notice that night came soon. Ash stopped running as he looked at the sky where there were fireworks exploding. It was a beautiful sight, and I stopped running as I walked beside him.

    “Look, Mist! Isn’t that pretty?” Ash asked.

    “It sure is!” I agreed, smiling.

    “And I know what to do with his beautiful sight…” Ash said, a mischievous glint and smile formed on his face.

    “What?” I asked.

    Ash laughed as he tackled me onto the ground.

    “Hey! Stop!” I yelled, laughing. “That tickles!”

    Suddenly, his lips landed on mine. I was shocked yet happy. He let go as he whispered to me

    “I love you, Mist.”

    I smiled as I replied back

    “I love you too, Ash.’

    Both I and him smiled as we hugged each other, confessing our love at last.

    SNAP!

    “Hey! Where did that light come from!” Ash asked, letting go of me.

    Then, Max, May and Brock went out of their hiding place, the bush, while Brock was holding a camera, running away laughing.

    “HEY! Get back here!” I yelled, angrily.

    “Brock, May and Max, you are so going to get it!” Ash yelled.

    I and Ash chased after Brock, May and Max. Boy, they were in deep trouble once we catch them.

    ~-~-~

    So? How was it?
    Last edited by Stephy; 20th May 2006 at 4:04 PM.
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    It was good. A bit short for my taste, though. I suport Pokeshipping %1,000,000,000 which means I almost always will read a Pokeshipping fic.

    The only mistake I noticed was that Misty kept saying "I and Ash did something or another". It just doesn't sound natural. It would sound more natural if it was "Ash and I did something or another", or "We did something or another." Those just sound more natural.

    Overall, it was a pretty good story, so I'll give it four stars. But I don't think it deserve a PG-13 rating. It actually seemed like a G rating to me.

    Edit: Whoo hoo! First reply!
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    AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! THAT WAS SO CUTEEEEEE!!!!!!!!! Awesome work!!!! That was- he did- eeh! That was very good! I do so love Pokeshippy fanfictions!!!! Adoribleness galore!

    You captured all the aspects of a truly good one shot!

    Great work! Keep it up!

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    Let's see, being 99.9% a contestshipper, and 0.1% pokeshipper, I still say this was EXCELLENT!!! Very good, you could really get a sense of the characters emotions, and it was soooo cute when they kissed. Ah, Brock just had to be evil and take that picture...

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    Thanks for the reviews...I just had to add the camera part, I don't want to end this story lovey-dovey XD
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    I agreee, the camera is a classic! (Ha, even I use it in COTN) It adds a very humourous note to the "song" (now that line I just used was corny)

    Once again I want to say,
    "YOU DID AN AMAZING JOB!!!"

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    Ohoho, very cute. I love the ending.

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    [gives the legendary Butler Empire cake]
    0_0...-gos all starry eyed-
    CAKE!!! -eats it all- XD
    Me love cake!
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