To May from Drew

[chrisivy]

You will be by my side,
smiling at me with pride,
we will hold eachothers hands,
ignoring our friends and our fans.

I love you and you love me,
and that will give us the key,
of including another in our family,
and we will become a family of three..

-did you like it? It was basicly about May and Drew...

[Leon Phelps]

Regarding your poem, the rhyme scheme was kinda stale.

[Jonouchi]

Anyway, the poem's alright. There were some parts that didn't quite fit the rhyme scheme, if you know what I mean, that is.

[Flashfire]

But I do agree about the staleness part. This was true, but not everyone feels like going to the advice forum before they write, though they should, and I should have.


Apologies had a lot to take out this post but I wanted to keep that comment. If anybody gets at this post note I editted it ~ Sandra

[Zephyr Flare]

Poetry is acceptable, Shadowblazer you are bordering stupidity with flaming, threader that was spam ¬¬

I've moved this to the correct location now and editted everybody's post to save the job of mentioning this. I'll be watching you Shadow, there was absolutely no need for that outburst.

Sandra

[CuteDrew667]

It was kinda short, but sweet. I liked it. but i think it would have been better if it was longer, or lead into a story

[Stephy]

Aww! Kawaii and Cute! I loved the peom! ^_^ It quite rhymes, too! ^_^

~Cecilia~~

[Kiori]

It's a good poem, but... I don't think they'll be ignoring their friends if they were to be in love. :x I don't even think May would ignore her fans, because well, that'll be OOC. But great job on it. ^^

PS: Insert a fic rating (G/PG/etc) in your post. Now.

[chrisivy]

Ok thanks... This was my first time though... heheheh