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    Why a short SasuSaku poem
    In Sasukue's point of view.
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    Why
    Why don’t you hate me?
    After rejecting you for so long.
    Why don’t you kill me?
    If you know that I’m wrong.
    Why don’t you stop me?
    I’ve been making you blue.
    Why do you love me?
    When I never wanted you to
    Why did you cry?
    Making it hard for me to leave
    Why did you sigh?
    When I was getting what I need
    Why did you buy?
    Everything for me
    Why do you love me?
    When you know that I’m mean
    Why did you help me?
    When I never needed you
    Why did you stay?
    On the days I was blue
    Why did you cry?
    When I didn't need you to
    Thanks for loving me
    But I can’t do the same for you
    Last edited by Uzamaki Hinata; 21st July 2006 at 2:47 AM.
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    Wow! I can't believe this poem! It's amazing on how you captured the feelings or thoughts of Sasuke on how how thinks or feels on Sakura. I thoughts this sentences in your fic could be switched, or maybe I got the wrong thought of this sentence, sorry.

    "Why didn’t you help me?-> Why did you help me?
    When I really needed you-> When I never needed you
    Why didn’t you stay?-> Why did you stay?
    When I was blue-> Only on the days I was blue
    Why didn’t you cry?Why did you cry?
    When I needed you too-> When I didn't need you too
    Thanks for loving me
    But I can’t do the same for you"

    The reason I kinda changed or switched some of the sentence was because Saukue attitude was like that in the series, he was the stubborn one not needed any help from anyone except to help himself on achieveing his selfhish goals.

    But, also job anyways!

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    Okay I..... edited it!
    Thanks for the review and help!
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    Wow, this is really nice and the speaker really does sound like Sasuke and his view on Sakura. ^__^ I really liked it.

    Each part reflects on different SasuSaku moments, not to mention I really like this couple as well. Poetry isn't easy to do all the time, but I think you did really well.
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    Awesome. It's amazing how well you caught Sasuke's feelings. And it really makes sense. This is the first Naruto poem I've ever read and I have to say I'm impressed. And as Hyuuga Hinata said, poetry isn't always easy but you did a great job.

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