Soaring high above
Another great chapter, btw du get my PM as my computer went as i sent it! stupid virus! Keep up the good work, cannie wait to see what happens!
Since I said i'd be critical here goes, the owrd "he" is written all in capitals, you shpuld be disgraced!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nah seriously it was great as always
OMG!! This story is so incredibly sweet!! I was squealing with joy every 2 minutes!! I can't wait for more and I'll check back every day!
LOVEDISC RULES!!!!! (look at the bottom of my siggy you will find out why) *laughs evilly at May's expese*
It was sooo adorable how you made Ash jealous in the 7th Chapter (I bounced on my chair with happiness). I wish this was a book so i could just keep reading....and reading....It's so good! One of the sweetest things on the face of the planet! (I mean every word I say, too.)
I love to write stories, but I stink at writing stories about people. Animals (and POKéMON, of COURSE!!)are my real passion when it comes to writing! But you...you've mastered the exact personalities of each character (except May...she doesn't whine often enough XD)!! And the pokémon's personalities are just right, too. Bravo, and more power to you!! ^_^
Cerulean Trainer
I am sooooooooooooo happy that Chapter 7 was posted!Don't fall back in your school work because of us. I'm sure everyone will wait just a bit longer if that means that you'll do well in school.
Sorry to ask you about your spelling so much, but I thought it was interesting the way your spell colours. Do you live in the UK or do you just spell it that way. Sorry, just curious. 8)
Keep up the great work! I'm looking forward to Chapter 8!
Fanfic Buddies with the awesome, sweet, and cool Water Spirit! Also, thanks for making my CG acronym!
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wow. I mean wow. Another good chapter. No words can describe how good this chapter was. It was incredible. Everything could be pictured in my mind. Keep it please.
~roo~
Banned
Very good chapter. I liked how they beat up Ash for not liking a certain painting. Very funny.
Also, I like the part of Ash protecting Misty from Wallace. It just shows that Ash really loves Misty. Which alot of us know already.
Now, with the info I have, Wallace really is trying to take Misty away, but Ash already knows that, and is making sure Wallace won't pull it off.
Can't wait for Chapter 8.
Wow! That is cool but then that could be scary too. Right?They followed the corridor down and May opened the door. It was a bedroom. It consisted of a four-poster bed with a blue and silver quilt with matching curtains. It had many canvas around the room – some finished and some not – and an easel by the window. Misty walked over to the small canvas on the easel and gasped.
An outline of herself was drawn on to the canvas and the outline of a head beside her. Two taller heads were above her’s with two smaller ones below her. No detail had been put into any of the faces except hers.
Ash looked at the canvas with Misty’s picture on it and then looked back at Wallace. Wallace caught his eye secretly and turned the canvas around so that it was no longer visible. Ash narrowed his eyes at him and stepped in front of Misty protectively as Wallace walked over to them.
Plain Trainer
An excellent chapter, although a bit on the shorter side (which still isn't bad.) I especially liked the description of the mermaid and prince painting, and the scene with Wallace being confused was clear in my head. I'm not really a shipper or an avid fic reader, but this story has really changed my views. The description is top-notch and I'm starting to like the whole AAML idea. Well, don't feel rushed and keep up the excellent work. And please, would you PM me whenever you have a new chapter up? Thanks!
+kiss of an angel+
OMG...AHHHHH! I love it sooooooooooooo much! Yeah...as someone mentions above...dont fall behind on your school work because of us. I mean it would be great for the chapters to pop up quickly but if you fall behind, then you would have to work harder and that would mean a longer wait. eheh..=]. ok..that sounds a little selfish...sorry!
oooo..i LOVE that story soooo much! The tale about the mermaid and the prince is just sooo cool. I mean when I first read it..I thought MISTY and ASH! I mean the prince has BLACK hair (like Ash) and the girl has red hair (like Misty) and the its a MERMAID (Misty) and a PRINCE (well..he kinda played a prince when he helped Misty). Its just them =D! I also LOVE the part where Ash is being protective of Misty cause he is starting to think other things about Wallace. Its just sooo interesting and Im starting to love this story even more (if thats possible). That is scary, Wallace is having a picture of Misty here. Thats a little freaky.
OK...PLEASE hurry up and update soon. I CANT WAIT! This was one of the bestttt chapters EVER! GO YOU! Continue the good work Water Spirit. Im rooting for you
Reach high,
For stars lie hidden in your soul.
Dream deep,
For every dream precedes the goal.
+:: Ralph Vaull Starr ::+
Soaring high above
The Mermaid & Prince thing sorta reminded me of the episode with the show in cerulean gym, where ash came to help misty in the battle vs team rocket (prince in shining armor?)
Hummmmm i've got my theorys about that painting and not just the obvious one!
Excellent! I loved it ^^ I was laughing out loud when May and Max were hiding from Wallace! I really hate being repeditive but, I love this fic your style is awesome. Oh well Im gonna be looking foward to your next chapter, until then, seeya.
Yeah, having a painting of Misty...that would be REALLY freaky....I'd be very scared. No wonder Ash is trying to protect her!! *squeals because it's so cute* at least we know Ash isn't TOTALLY blind...
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~*Animus Aquae*~
Haha! My observent readers are catching hints! ^____^
LOL! Yeah, I sometimes hold the shift button down to long because I type quite fast but I'll make sure to be more careful when typing!Originally posted by Flaming Charizard
Since I said i'd be critical here goes, the owrd "he" is written all in capitals, you shpuld be disgraced!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*applaudes* you got it spot onOriginally posted by xsweet peax
oooo..i LOVE that story soooo much! The tale about the mermaid and the prince is just sooo cool. I mean when I first read it..I thought MISTY and ASH! I mean the prince has BLACK hair (like Ash) and the girl has red hair (like Misty) and the its a MERMAID (Misty) and a PRINCE (well..he kinda played a prince when he helped Misty). Its just them =D!I was hoping that it might ring some bells. I'm glad that my hints aren't too covered up! Or should I leave them a bit more open???
Thanks for understanding. It is hard trying to keep up the fic along with H/W, athletics club, H/W & more H/W etc. but I do try my bestDon't fall back in your school work because of us. I'm sure everyone will wait just a bit longer if that means that you'll do well in school.
Lol! Never apologise for being curious!Sorry to ask you about your spelling so much, but I thought it was interesting the way your spell colours. Do you live in the UK or do you just spell it that way. Sorry, just curious. 8)
Yeah, I was a bit worried about how everyone would react to this bit but there was no other way I could put if for something that will happen in the future. I know it sounds a bit um... dodgy as to what Wallace is up to but I can assure you that nothing dodgy will happen between Wallace and Misty in that sense.Wow! That is cool but then that could be scary too. Right?They followed the corridor down and May opened the door. It was a bedroom. It consisted of a four-poster bed with a blue and silver quilt with matching curtains. It had many canvas around the room – some finished and some not – and an easel by the window. Misty walked over to the small canvas on the easel and gasped.
An outline of herself was drawn on to the canvas and the outline of a head beside her. Two taller heads were above her’s with two smaller ones below her. No detail had been put into any of the faces except hers.
Ash looked at the canvas with Misty’s picture on it and then looked back at Wallace. Wallace caught his eye secretly and turned the canvas around so that it was no longer visible. Ash narrowed his eyes at him and stepped in front of Misty protectively as Wallace walked over to them.
He suspects something that could be 'dodgy' about Wallace and his 'feelings' towards Misty, which is showing his reactions in a bolder way.Originally posted by L100Meganium
Yeah, having a painting of Misty...that would be REALLY freaky....I'd be very scared. No wonder Ash is trying to protect her!! *squeals because it's so cute* at least we know Ash isn't TOTALLY blind...
Originally posted by Polaris
And please, would you PM me whenever you have a new chapter up? Thanks!
Well Thank you to everyone who has reviewed this chapter and I hope that you will continue reading my future chapters! Your support and reviews mean so much to and I look forward to reading what you have to say!
An extremely happy
Water Spirit
XxX
CHAPTER 31 IS FINALLY HERE!!!! Chapter 32 arrives 10th June.
Other Fanfics: Just For You - A Pokeshipper's Tale
+kiss of an angel+
nooo..its perfect the way it is! Its not too covered up. Like I said, its perfect! ^^ I think a lot of people got it..cause its PERFECT! AHAHAH..sorry =].Originally Posted by Water Spirit
*applaudes* you got it spot on
Anyways, cant wait till tomorrow! Your next chapter might be up by then so I will be waiting for it to come. Ahhh..cant WAIT! I'll probably be thinking about it all day long. But I bet you that when the time comes, I wish it wont. Since that would mean you would be away and wont be back till Saturday and then you have to write the story and concentrate on your school work. And THAT would mean that I wont be reading the next chapter for a long time. *sighx*...
Reach high,
For stars lie hidden in your soul.
Dream deep,
For every dream precedes the goal.
+:: Ralph Vaull Starr ::+
That latest chapter made me wow. Nice work! Good desciption and Length, and that painting thing. Nice work Water Spirit!
I like how you described the mermaid and the prince like Ariel and Eric from The Little Mermaid! This story is so awesome! I love it!
Well since you still have school for about another 3 weeks you should maybe try to focus on your school first then on your spare time with your story. We dont want Water Spirit to fail. Just take your time and write only when you can that way you can catch up on your work.
~roo~
Awesome chapter, Water Spirit! I like that touch with the paintings. Yes, I think you did a perfect job on this chapter. I like how Ash gets protective of Misty there.
And as for the PM notification for new chapters, add me to that... uh, list.
This gets better and better, and actually inspires me for a future AAML story I have in mind.
~*Animus Aquae*~
Da Da! Chapter 8 as Promised
Chapter 8 – Old Friends, A New Enemy?
“Misty!” a few members of the crowd nearest to her called out.
She beamed at the people she recognised and blushed as a handsome red-haired boy who was taller than her, approached her.
“Misty!” he said as he stood before her. “It’s great to see you again!”
“Hi, Rudy!” she replied. “How are you?”
The teenager wore black trousers with a long-sleeved shirt. On top, he wore a white, sleeveless jacket. He was the gym leader of Trovita Island in the Orange Archlopelogo and had met Misty on her travels with Ash. He had instantly fallen in love with the beautiful trainer and had tried to persuade her to remain at his gym, though she had chosen to be with Ash.
He looked at the scowling trainer behind Misty and remembered him as the challenger who had been Misty’s travelling companion.
“Hiya, Ash! Figured out why you’re a lucky guy yet?” Rudy teased.
“Huh?” Ash was in such a bad-tempered mood about Rudy’s arrival that he hadn’t quite acknowledged what Rudy had said.
Rudy chuckled to himself as Misty blushed.
“Guess that day hasn’t come yet!” he bowed to Misty. “There may not be any music to accompany us but your beauty radiates a harmonious melody that has echoed in my ears from the day I met you. Would you like to dance?”
Misty accepted his proposal and they both began dancing around the room. Misty laughed and her cheeks tinted a darker red as she watched Ash’s unhappy face as they danced.
They stopped dancing and laughed as a young man tapped Misty on the shoulder. It was Dorien, a young gym leader whom Ash, Misty and Brock had met before his gym had been approved by the Pokemon League. He had started off as a private gym in the Johto area and knew Misty’s sisters well.
“Hi, Misty!” he said cheerfully to her. “How’ve you been? I spoke to your sisters earlier and they’re a bit worried about you because you haven’t been in contact with them so I said I’d keep an eye out for you. Maybe you should call them before the demonstration starts.”
Misty gasped. “Oh, I forgot!” she replied alarmed. “Wallace is there a phone around where I could call my sisters quickly?” she asked the gym leader without thinking.
Ash looked at her surprised. Her reaction to him was as if they hadn’t even witnessed the strange painting in Wallace’s bedroom and he suspected that it hadn’t crossed her mind as she was so busy socialising with friends she hadn’t seen in a long time.
Wallace smiled at Misty. “Of course, please follow me. I would also like to ask you something in private.” He said while glaring at Ash.
Ash narrowed his eyes at him, and then looked alarmed at what he had just said to Misty.
“Misty, you can’t go alone!” he shouted at her without realising what he’d said.
Brock, Max, and May, who were talking to Rudy, looked at him suspiciously.
Misty looked at Ash with a confused expression.
“Why not?” she asked slyly.
“Because… because of that thing with thingy.” Ash replied awkwardly as Wallace watched him.
Misty couldn’t understand what he was trying to say.
“What?” she asked perplexed.
“The incident earlier with the thing in the room.” Ash replied frustrated through gritted teeth.
Misty shook her head and sighed.
“Wallace can you show me the phone please?”
Wallace led her behind a curtain to their left and they both disappeared behind it. Ash looked extremely nervous. He went over to his friends and reminded them about the painting with Misty in Wallace’s bedroom. They shouted at Ash for letting Misty go off with Wallace on her own and made their way quietly over to the curtain as not to attract anyone’s attention. Ash went to pull back the curtain when Wallace appeared in front of him.
“I’m sorry but I cannot let you enter in there.” He said firmly.
“Why not?” Ash sounded agitated.
“Because behind that curtain is off limits to all guests and I can not let you progress any further.”
“Well, what about Misty? She’s behind there!” Ash yelled.
A few members in the crowd started looking towards the arguing pair. Wallace looked at Ash sternly. He called to one of his guards standing by the front doors.
“Please make sure that no one goes through this curtain.” Wallace commanded the bulky guard as he stood in front of the door.
“Attention guests!” Wallace shouted loudly as the crowd faced him.
He was wearing the same light blue swim shorts that he was wearing earlier and stepped towards the crowd. The crowd moved out of his way to reveal a large pool area with a waterfall cascading water down into it. Suspended above the flowing water was a diving board and two platforms where presumably the trainer and gym leader stood while battling. Ash glared at Wallace and then the guard before walking away to the centre of the hall. The others followed.
“We have to get Misty out of there.” Ash whispered to the gang firmly.
“But how?” May questioned. “We’re not gonna get past that guard are we.”
Ash looked at his yellow buddy who was sitting on his shoulder and nodded to it.
“May, I need you to let out Skitty and Beautifly. I’m gonna need them for a distraction.”
He whispered his plan to the others and they nodded their agreement. May released Skitty and Beautifly and explained to them what she wanted them to do. Skitty ran at the guard and weaved in and out of its legs. Beautifly danced around his head as the man tried to shoo them away. The crowd was distracted by Wallace making a speech on one of the platforms. The man hopped backwards and forwards, attempting to catch the two Pokemon as Ash slipped past him and behind the curtain.
It was dark and there were no lights around. Ash felt for the wall and followed it down a small corridor. He could hear Wallace’s voice progressively getting louder as he walked further down the corridor.
“And I would like to introduce my beautiful assistant for this evening, Misty from Cerulean City!”
“Huh?” Ash said and walked faster down the corridor.
He heard the crowd applaud and cheer loudly. Light was becoming visible at a turning on the right and he looked out of it to see the back of Misty in a pink and purple bikini standing on one of the platforms. On the one opposing her stood Wallace. She held a pokeball in her hand and had two others by her feet. Wallace was also holding a pokeball with two spares by the side of him.
“Now, Misty and I will have a proper Pokemon battle, 3 on 3, and then I will go through some of my specialised techniques. We will not go easy on each other and will both be fighting to win. I will also record this battle so that I can point out some of my techniques that I use in this battle and go into further detail later.”
He indicated to a cameraman standing by the side of the pool who waved to the crowd as he adjusted his lens.
“Let’s begin!” the referee shouted and held up two flags.
Misty kissed her pokeball for luck and released her Gyarados. Wallace allowed his Milotic to come out of its pokeball and land gracefully in the water. The ground shook beneath them and Misty fell backwards on to her platform. Wallace managed to keep his balance as the crowd screamed. The roof of the gym caved in and a hot air balloon shaped as a Meowth descended from the air and hovered above the broken roof.
“To protect the world from devastation.” A dark red haired woman recited.
She was leaning casually against her partner who continued their poem.
“To unite all people within our nation.” A blue haired man grinned as he watched the crowd panic.
“To denounce the evils of truth and love.”
“To extend our reach to the stars above.”
“Jesse!” The girl shouted and hung off the side of the balloon.
“James!” The boy imitated her on the other side.
They both screamed as they realised that they were about to fall and hauled themselves back into the balloon and recovered. Jesse cleared her throat.
“Team Rocket, blasts off at the speed of light.”
“Surrender now, or prepare to fight, fight, fight.” James finished as a Meowth hopped up in front of him.
“Meowth, that’s right!” The Pokemon chanted.
It allowed a gigantic hose to fall down into the water and started sucking up the Pokemon and the water.
“No! Gyarados!” Misty shouted desperately as she tried to recall her Pokemon.
It disappeared up the hose. The two pokeballs beside her fell into the water as the waves brushed against the platform and Misty dove in frantically after them. Under water she grabbed them and held on to them tightly as she was whirled around in circles, moving closer and closer to the pipe. A few of the members in the crowd were attempting to dive in after Misty, including Rudy, Dorien and Wallace but a young man beat them to it. Ash yelled out Misty’s name and dove into the water after her – still fully clothed. He caught sight of her underwater and began swimming towards her. He was dragged closer to her by the current of the water moving nearer to the hosepipe but got caught up in the swirling water. Misty opened her eyes and saw Ash. They began spinning around each other – trying to grab the other’s hand. Ash managed to grab hold of Misty’s wrist, as they were both sucked up the drainpipe.
End Chapter 8
Well, as promised Chapter 8 is now up for you to hopefully enjoy and review. Personally, I don't think this Chapter is that great. I will make a better attempt on Chapter 9 to make up for this poor attempt.
Thank you to everyone who has reviewed Chapter 7, your opinions are always appreciated.
Thanks for understanding. The only problem is that I'm going on holiday for a month and won't have access to the Internet. But I will TRY and take a laptop with me and try and get a connection but if not I will post up a lot of Chapters for you to read when I come back. Sorry everyone.Originally posted by my lovely pair up buddy roodude15
Well since you still have school for about another 3 weeks you should maybe try to focus on your school first then on your spare time with your story. We dont want Water Spirit to fail. Just take your time and write only when you can that way you can catch up on your work.
You are on my PM list, now.Originally posted by Shawn1036902
And as for the PM notification for new chapters, add me to that... uh, list.
This gets better and better, and actually inspires me for a future AAML story I have in mind.
Please let me know what you think of this chapter. I'd be interested in knowing where to make improvements and what you generally think of it.
Thanks
Water Spirit
XxX
CHAPTER 31 IS FINALLY HERE!!!! Chapter 32 arrives 10th June.
Other Fanfics: Just For You - A Pokeshipper's Tale
Soaring high above
That was (as always) great! I like the way Ash is getting wverprotective thats good!
Shame you had to leave us on a cliffhanger before ya trip!!! thats annoying, can't wait for the next bit!
wow another marvelous chapter Water Spirit. You captured everybody perfectly well especially team rocket. I can't wait for your next chapter when you return. Very detailed and I especially like the fact that Ash is getting jealous now. Good job and keep it up and another good cliffhanger for your fic even though it will leave me in suspense for a while......
~roo~
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