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    Talking Chapter 10 - Record for longest chapter in this fic!

    Well, here it is! Chapter 10 with the record for being the longest chapter in this fic with exactly 10 pages in Word! (double my usual length!) Enjoy!

    Chapter 10 – A Gain or a Loss?

    Ash fell on to his knees by the edge of the cliff as he helplessly watched his friend disappear into the mists.

    “NO! MISTY!” he shouted desperately again.

    He heard Misty’s screams die away when he lost sight of her and punched the ground in anger and grief. His cap was low over his face so that no one could see the tears forming in his eyes. He heard footsteps behind him and quickly turned around. The man who had pushed Misty was looking anxiously over the side of the cliff.

    “Oh man, the boss isn’t going to like this.” He said aloud and in a nervous tone. “If I don’t find that orb I’m done for.”

    He clumsily moved towards the path that Misty had been standing in front of and edged his way down it. Ash grinded his teeth and had daggers in his eyes. He ran at the man and jumped at him.

    “You pushed her!” he shouted angrily. “Why did you push her?”

    The man threw Ash to one side, back on to the open plain, and continued down the path.

    “Don’t you have any heart!?” Ash yelled after him.

    “I’m just doing my job and I don’t care what happens to anyone who stands in my way!” the man said tonelessly as he moved out of sight.

    “But she wasn’t even preventing you! She was just confused and you pushed her! And she’s probably…”

    Ash couldn’t bring himself to say what was possibly true. A loud roar came from inside the cave and the man moved more quickly along the path.

    “Wha- what’s in there?” Ash asked nervously.

    “A powerful creature that was awoken by the powers of the Blue Orb. It is our job to capture it.” The man replied before he was no longer visible.

    Ash stood up and looked in front of the cave. The low growling continued and the walls of the cave shook. Ash moved over to the side of the cliff and looked down.

    “I’m sorry, Misty.” He said quietly to himself and looked downcast. “I hated it when you left before but now you’ve really gone...”

    He wiped away the tears that fell down his face, crouched down and leaned against the side of the mountain.

    ***


    A lifeless body fell into a deep pool, which was formed by a waterfall that cascaded water down from a crack in the mountain. The body continued to fall into the depths as a sphere dropped heavily into the water and sank to the bottom. When it hit the seabed, it sent out vicious pulses through the water, causing the body to float towards the surface. The orb glowed a deep blue and blinded everything that was swimming nearby. The orb floated up towards the body and both were moved gracefully to the surface – as if pulled up by an invisible hand.

    The area was in a hidden clearing, where trees and plants grew freely and enclosed a deep pool. The body was washed into the shallows of the pool and rested softly on the grassy area. The body was limp and showed no signs of movement as a pokeball rolled out of a pocket in the girl’s bikini bottoms and into the water. A pokemon emerged from the ball and danced on the surface of the water. It saw its master lying in the water and swam over to her and nudged her with its nose. It became disheartened and panicky as the girl did not respond and looked around to see if there was any hope of anybody finding them and aiding the dying girl.

    ***

    “Ash! Misty!” Brock shouted out his friends’ names.

    Wallace had organised a search party to look for the two missing teenagers after Team Rocket’s balloon had disappeared. Water Pokemon were searching the sea along with their trainers while others were searching the lands.

    “Sir! Someone from Mount Pyre is on the phone for you.” One of Wallace’s assistants said as he approached the gym leader. “They say it’s urgent.”

    Wallace hurried inside, closely followed by Max and Brock. Wallace picked up the phone and looked at the video screen in front of him, which displayed the caller.

    “What’s wrong?” He asked promptly.

    An old woman looked at him holding a tissue in one hand and dabbing her eyes.

    “Wallace, they’ve taken it! Team Aqua attacked my husband when he was tending to the rituals for the Pokemon and they stole the Blue Orb. The red orb had been glowing ever since and it has got brighter. I fear that the legendary Pokemon have awakened.”

    Wallace’s eyes widened in fear and amazement, then calmed back to a serious tone.

    “Thank you for the information. I will see what I can do.” He said before placing the phone back on the receiver and ending the call.

    “What was that about?” Brock asked him curiously.

    “Yeah, and what does she mean by the legendary Pokemon have awakened?” Max added.

    Wallace walked past them both and back outside. He addressed one of his own parties of assistants and told them to progress towards the mountains and search there but be careful to stay clear of entering ‘the cave’. May came over to Brock and Max.

    “Any sign of them?” Brock asked her.

    She shook her head. “No, nothing. I’m really worried now. Usually we can find Team Rocket in a couple of minutes but they’ve really done a good job on this one. I hope Ash and Misty are OK.”

    Brock smiled sympathetically at her. “As long as they’ve got each other’s company they’ll be fine.”

    He walked over to Wallace and questioned him about his phone call from the mysterious old lady. Wallace sighed and signalled for Max and May to join in their conversation.

    “There is a legend,” he started. “That talks about two legendary Pokemon who fought against each other in a raging battle but fell asleep in their resting places after the tiring battle. They were also said to have calmed when two mysterious orbs were found by their resting places and were restored to the top of Mount Pyre – a place where deceased Pokemon are remembered. It is believed that if these two orbs were to leave the mountain and return back to the place where the legendary Pokemon were thought to be, then the Pokemon would reawaken and another catastrophic war would begin.”

    The group looked at him in surprise.

    “Since the balloon was heading north, I fear that you friends may be in danger as that is where the Pokemon are thought to rest and the mountains are highly dangerous.”

    “Well, we’ll have to and find them.” May said confidently. “We can’t just abandon them if we think they might be in danger.”

    Wallace led them, along with his search party, to the foot of one of the mountains. They trekked up it for quite a while before forking off to another road that wound around another mountain. The group walked for over an hour before reaching the bottom of a mountain where a thin sandy beach stretched across it to another path. The party called out Ash and Misty’s names, hoping to hear a reply. None came. Wallace led them up another path where they walked single file and cautiously up the progressively sloping path.

    ***

    Ash looked gloomily at the floor. He was still crouched down and thinking about the loss of his friend. He couldn’t bring himself to believe that she was truly gone forever – and that he would never see her again. He thought about making his way down the mountain to see if he could see any signs of her and positively did so when he believed that there was still hope that she was alive. He cautiously moved down the path when the ground started shaking. The roars from inside the cave were growing louder and he grabbed on to the side of the mountain tightly and yelled out when he was about to fall. Seconds later it stopped. Ash had no idea as to what had just happened but instinct urged him to keep on moving in case anything else unexpected happened. He eventually reached the bottom of the path without any unpredicted incidents, only to be greeted by cheerful shouts and relieved laughter.

    “Ash!” May shouted as she ran towards her friend. “Are you OK?”

    He didn’t answer. In all honesty, he felt terrible. He had lost two of his best friends and neither one of them seemed likely to make an appearance. Pikachu had disappeared with Team Rocket who hadn’t left any traces of being around and Misty… had disappeared for good. When the rest of the party had caught up with him and had seen that he was physically OK, they then questioned him on the whereabouts of Misty and Pikachu. Ash replied that he still hadn’t found Pikachu and finally managed to explain what had happened by the cave. Many of the members, including his friends were devastated by the news of Misty and vowed to find her and the man who had pushed her. Ash told them where Misty had fallen and Wallace led them through a tunnel that cut through the mountain that they were about to walk around. Ash led the way along with Wallace, desperate to find Misty – with Max, May and Brock not far behind.

    “Has anyone seen any sign of Team Rocket?” Ash asked Wallace quietly.

    Wallace shook his head.

    “No, but we will find them. I called for another search party to look further up the mountain before we found you, and another to look on the other side.”

    Ash gave him a small smile of gratitude but not enough to convince everyone that he felt satisfied about the situation. They moved on silently up the path with a few of the members of the party mumbling at the back.

    ***

    LuvDisc continued panicking and whined while nudging its master. The girl didn’t react. LuvDisc pushed a ball that was in the girl’s pocket and a pink Pokemon, with horns shaped like coral, was released. It looked at its master sprawled out on the grass and in the water and gently shook her shoulder with its tiny paw. It lovingly rubbed itself against her when she didn’t respond and communicated with LuvDisc to shout out for help. LuvDisc hopped back into the deeper water and swam into a glass orb without realising. It shook its head as it recovered its senses and stared angrily at the orb. It then glowed an aquatic blue and as if LuvDisc knew what it was, directed it towards its trainer by pushing it along with its nose. It smiled proudly at Corsola on its find when Corsola scowled it and told it to get back to its task and to stop being irresponsible. LuvDisc jumped in surprise and then proceeded with its task. It swam to the other end of the pool where there was a narrow opening between the trees, though it was too dense to see if there was any path to follow. It shouted and wailed, hoping to be heard and to find someone to rescue its trainer. Corsola watched it anxiously and knew all that they could do was wait.

    ***

    “Listen.” Wallace said when they reached the end of the tunnel.

    A faint wailing could be heard in the distance. The group focused their attention to identify where the sound was coming from.

    “Can you hear it?” Wallace asked Ash.

    Ash’s heart skipped a beat.

    “Could it be Misty?” he asked unbelievably and slightly excitedly.

    Wallace shook his head once again in disagreement.

    “No, it’s definitely the sound from a Pokemon, not a human.” He replied.

    Ash’s face, which had brightened for a moment, fell once more until he realised that it could be Pikachu.

    “Pikachu!” he shouted and ran forward towards the voice.

    He panted harder as he ran faster and faster and finally stopped when he heard something distinctive about the voice that was calling. The others caught up with him and were confused by his strange behaviour.

    “Luuuuv!” The voice shouted.

    “Luv?” Ash asked himself puzzled. “Oh! It’s a LuvDisc!” he said in amazement.

    “Maybe it’s Misty’s LuvDisc!” Brock exclaimed.

    Without any hesitation, the group continued to run in the direction of the voice until they came across a dense wood with a narrow path. The voice was growing louder as Ash scrambled through the trees and bushes. The others followed him. Ash emerged to find himself walking through a narrow opening in the trees. In front of him was a large pool with a LuvDisc jumping up and down excitedly to see him. There were trees and flowers everywhere but his heart sank when he saw a body hanging limply on the other side of the pool – half on the grass and half in the water. He saw her distinctly glowing amber hair and recognised her at once.

    “Misty!” he shouted.

    He ran around the pool. She was lying on her side with her back towards him, her waist downwards suspended in the water. Corsola saw him and signalled gleefully for him to come over. As the rest of the search party arrived, Brock, May, Max and Wallace rushed over after Ash while the others remained by the trees. Ash bent down on his knees beside Misty.

    “Misty?” he asked unsurely.

    He touched her gently as to try and shake her awake but quickly withdrew his hand from her. He gasped.

    “Woah! You’re freezing!” he shouted alarmed.

    He quickly pulled off his jumper and wrapped it around the upper half of her body. Brock and Wallace both bent down beside her. Wallace pulled her out of the water and on to her back. Her eyes were closed and she seemed to have a look of pain across her face. Her hair had fallen untidily across her face as it was still damp but she didn’t make any responding movements to their gestures. Wallace grabbed her wrist and checked for a pulse. Brock took off his jacket and also wrapped it around Misty.

    “We really need to get her to a doctor.” Brock said seriously.

    “Brock, she’s not…” Ash asked.

    May had her hands over her mouth and tears in her eyes. Max had his arms folded nervously as they both watched the emotional scene in front of them.

    Wallace shook his head. “No, she’s not dead. But she is very weak and her pulse is low. We need to get her out of here and to a hospital quickly.”

    Wallace ordered one of the men to phone for an ambulance and emergency transportation. He immediately did so as May recalled Misty’s Pokemon back to their pokeballs and Wallace helped put Misty on Brock’s back so that he could carry her as far as possible. The ground shook beneath them and everyone lost their balance and fell to the ground. Brock fell backwards and into the water, which was turning into a whirlpool. He let go of Misty as they both fell into the water and the jackets that she had been wrapped in fell on the surface. The earth still trembled as Brock emerged but without Misty.

    “Brock! Where’s Misty?” Ash shouted.

    The sky darkened above them as rain began to fall. Lightning flashed across the sky and a prevailing wind blew the cascading water into everyone’s faces.

    “Ash!” Brock shouted helplessly as he was dragged closer to the whirlpool.

    Wallace dived on to the ground and grabbed on to Brock’s hand before he spun around the pool again.

    “Misty!” Ash shouted as thunder drowned his voice.

    He could barely see anything. Misty floated around in circles in the whirlpool before disappearing beneath the surface.

    “Ash! Do something!” May yelled as she clung on to a tree with Max to prevent him from being blown away.

    Ash dived into the water after Misty. She was helplessly caught in the spiralling water and spinning around unconsciously. May watched him as a memory flashed across her mind. Time seemed to have stopped as she recalled watching Ash and Misty talking in front of a painting.

    The fisherman claimed to see a young soldier jump off his ship into the depths below after none of his acquaintances would believe that he saw a mermaid at the bottom of the sea. He explained to them that he was madly in love with her and as their mockery grew, he decided to spend the remainder of his life with the one he loved. He was seen diving into the sea and never surfaced. His body was never found but sailors say that he drowned in his stupidity. No one ever knew if he found the mermaid whom he cherished so dearly or whether they lived happily ever after.

    “Woah! I wonder what that was about!” May said as she came back to her senses.

    Max looked at her strangely.

    “What?!” he shouted loudly to her.

    She looked at her brother who clung on to the tree for dear life. She was holding on to one side of the tree and holding her bandana with the other.

    “It’s strange, but when I saw Ash dive into the water after Misty, I instantly thought of that painting we saw in Wallace’s gallery with that mermaid and the soldier guy! Ash said before that Misty once helped out in a show at her gym and was dressed as a mermaid!” She yelled over the deafening winds.

    “I can’t hear you!” Max shouted, as the winds grew stronger.


    Ash continued to swim towards Misty’s unconscious body underwater. He saw a figure ahead of him, who also swam over to Misty, and grabbed her around the waist and kicked towards the surface. Ash changed direction and kept his eyes focused on the person who now had possession of Misty as he followed. They surfaced and he saw Wallace swimming through the dangerous waves, caused by the wind, to the shore. Ash struggled to follow but managed after May grabbed his hand and pulled him in, along with Brock’s help. He panted as he remained on all fours and then looked up at Wallace who had turned Misty on her back. Her face had become expressionless and Ash immediately ran over to her and bent down beside her. The stormy weather died down quietly until all that remained was a black cloud hovering above them.

    “Misty?” He asked her. “Misty, come on! Wake up!” he shouted as he shook her.

    Tears slid down his face. Everyone around him looked emotionally towards him – May and Max crying and Brock holding back tears. Misty’s rosy skin had turned to a delicate white and life seemed to have drained away from her body.

    “We have to get a move on or we might loose her for good.” Wallace said sternly. “Let’s make a move before the weather picks up again.”

    Ash nodded while wiping his eyes and lowered his cap over his face. Wallace helped put Misty on to Brock’s back once more. He ordered some of his assistances to give him their jackets, which he wrapped tightly around Misty. They moved down the mountains as fast as possible before being stopped by three approaching jeeps. Wallace signalled for everyone to jump inside them. He helped Brock place Misty in the back of the one at the front of the queue where she leaned against May’s shoulder. Wallace hopped into seat beside her and Ash jumped into the passenger’s seat. Max and Brock climbed into the jeep behind them and they sped off quickly down the mountain.

    “Why hasn’t an ambulance come?” Wallace asked the driver firmly.

    “I’m sorry sir, but the hospital is receiving vicious freak weather and it’s not safe to drive on the roads. The best we could do was bring out three of the jeeps but even that proved difficult.” He replied calmly.

    Wallace looked behind him at the passengers in the back seat. May and Ash had extremely worried expressions upon their faces and Misty still hadn’t moved.

    “Has she made any responses to anything you have said?” Wallace asked Ash.

    Ash shook his head. “No, and she’s really cold.”

    Wallace looked back at the driver.

    “Is there anyway for us to make it to the hospital?” he asked the driver seriously.

    “No one has been able to travel since the bad weather hit. We were lucky to get this far but we almost got blown over a couple of times and two of the jeeps are out of action because of the winds.” He said in a cautious tone.

    Wallace sighed.

    “Get us to the Pokemon Centre as soon as possible. It’s probably the best we can do for now and hopefully Nurse Joy will be able to tend to a human patient.”

    Rain started to fall once again on the windscreen. The winds were picking up and caused the water to fall in sheets across the screen – obscuring the driver’s vision.

    “Oh man, I won’t be able to travel in this for much longer if this weather keeps up.” The driver said nervously.

    He sneaked a glance at Wallace but he was calm and focused his attention on the sight through the windscreen. The sky had darkened rapidly and the driver put his headlights on full blast, though it didn’t help much. Streaks of lightning flared across the sky and lit up the area for a few seconds at a time. The driver couldn’t see anything out of the screen even with his windscreen wipers on max. He put the brakes on suddenly as thunder rumbled heavily above them.

    “I’m sorry, but there is no way I am driving any further. I can’t see a thing and we’re bound to crash.” He said more confidently than he felt.

    Wallace didn’t look at him. He unfastened his seatbelt and opened the door. As he got out, he saw the other jeeps stopped behind them and watched as Brock and Max stepped down from the vehicle. He looked around him and saw that they had left the mountains and were on the road back to Sootopolis. He opened the rear door and ordered Ash to get out. He obeyed though confused as Wallace hauled Misty out of the vehicle and told Brock to help place her on his back. May jumped out of the jeep and covered her head as the rain plummeted on top of them. When Misty was placed securely on Wallace’s back, he started running down the road. Water flowed quickly in small streams alongside the road that had been formed by the severe weather. The group of friends followed Wallace eagerly; splashing in the newly formed streams and puddles without a care. Everyone was soaked and Wallace’s hair fell limply across his face. He shook his head to try and dislodge the irritating strands and jumped as thunder crashed loudly.

    “I don’t like this!” May yelled in a frightened voice.

    “We have to keep going!” Ash urged.

    “How much further is it to the Pokemon Centre, Wallace?” Brock shouted.

    “Not far!” Wallace replied. “Just keep following this road!”

    They could barely see anything because of the sheer density of the rain but they were able to distinguish small specks of light in the distance. They pressed on as their hopes rose at seeing lights emitted from the city. The passed a few houses on the outskirts before entering the brightly lit city. Some of the lights had been blown over and others were no longer working. Wallace led them up a fleet of stone steps to a round building, which had a large ‘P’ above it. As he entered through the automatic doors, he stopped to let the others catch up with him and to also catch his breath. A fire was blazing in the corner of the room, which was surrounded by sofas and armchairs. The lights were dimmed low and candles were placed in dark areas of the entrance. No one was around. The entrance was deserted. Wallace shouted out Joy’s name along with Brock and Max. A young lady came out of a door beside a desk and looked startled to see the soaking wet group that had just entered.

    “What’s going on?” she asked in a high-pitched voice. “Why have you been out in this dreadful weather? You should be inside where it is safe and dry.”

    “Nurse Joy, this girl is very weak and there is no possible way for us to get her to the hospital in time.” Wallace said firmly. “Would it be possible for you to please tend to her and do the best you can?”

    Nurse Joy gasped at the sight of Misty on Wallace’s back.

    “Whatever happened to her?” she shrieked. “She looks awful!”

    “Nurse Joy, please help Misty!” Ash pleaded. “I know that you specialise in treating Pokemon but Misty is really sick and she needs help!”

    Nurse Joy nodded and looked at him sternly. “Of course, I’ll do what ever I can to help her.”

    She called for two Pokemon that were standing in the doorway to help her with Misty. They were both large, rounded Pokemon who wore little nurse hats and had a pouch on their fronts with an egg inside.

    “Chansey!” They chanted as they brought in a patient trolley and assisted Wallace in placing Misty on to it.

    The two Pokemon wheeled her off into a double door room at the back and a red sign with an injection symbol on it lit up to indicate an emergency examination was in progress. Nurse Joy rushed up to the doors then stopped and turned around to face the group.

    “I’m afraid all that you can do now is wait for me to bring you news.” She said sadly. “But your welcome to stay in one of the spare rooms but we are a little full. I can always provide you with blankets if you want to stay by the fire because I think I only have one room left that will sleep four of you.”

    “That’s OK.” Wallace replied. “I’ll stay out here with some blankets if that’s OK and they can have the room.” He said indicating towards Brock, Ash, May and Max.

    He looked at their tired faces, which were set with determination.

    “No way.” Ash said firmly. “Misty might need us and I’m staying here in case she does.”

    “Me too.” Brock agreed confidently. “Misty’s are best friend and we’re not going leave her when she needs us the most.”

    May and Max nodded in agreement behind him. Wallace sighed.

    “Very well. Could we please have some blankets Nurse Joy?”

    She smiled at him and produced five blue blankets from under the desk and gave them to Wallace before disappearing into the room where Misty was being treated.

    End Chapter 10

    Well, there you have it. Chapter 10. I personally think this one makes up for the poor excuse of Chapter 9 and I hope you will agree but if not I will try and make up for it in Chapter 11! - whether its due to the length or what I don't know - but I am always interested (I know I keep saying it but it is true!) in what you think of it so PLEASE review!

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    OO..can I ask you something Water Spirit?? How many chapters do you think you can put up before you go on your vacation??
    Hmmm... I'm not entirely sure. I will try and get to Chapter 15 for everybody before I go but I really can't guarentee that because you know what I'm like and with H/W... *hears moans from everybody and feels really guilty* I will try to not let you down and get to Chapter 15. I am still working on the plan to get a laptop to go with me and to have Internet access so that I can post up chapters so you might find me about if I get a connection.... but if not.... then I can promise that I will write at LEAST 4 chapters for you while I'm away. SORRY EVERYBODY! But please don't let this news discourage you from reading it!

    In the meantime, hope you enjoy it and please let me know what you think of it!

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    *Silence while mouth is wide open* ..... Cliffhanger - Must - contain - urge - to - panic. Misty?! The suspense is unbearable!

    What can i say Water Spirit, but WOW I am blown away by this fic. I'm sorry for not posting my thoughts on your last few Chapters, i should have been here more! ;_;
    That last chapter was so exiting, i could not take my eyes off it. It really sucked you into the story, which is one reason your fic is so great. Misty better be alright. As for Ash, i really could imagine him reacting like that in the last two chapters. Poor boy, can you imagine how he would react if he really did think Misty was dead? I loved the suspense, the shippyness, May having that flashback about the Portrait and the way you portraid just how strong Ash's feelings were for Misty. It was really touching, and i felt really emotional.

    I LOVED LOVED LOVED it. Your fanfic is one of the best AAMRNs i honestly have ever read =D *Jumps around* I can't wait for the next chapter, and i hope you can take a laptop with you Water Spirit, because we can't live without your fic Don't worry if you can't though, we promise to keep looking out. Awwwww i just want to see what happens to Misty! ;.; If she's okay, (Which i think she will be) i can't wait to see Ash's reaction when she wakes up. Shippyness galore! I will love it ^.~
    Just don't let her die, because i'd be devastated!
    *Hugs Water Spirit for making my day*
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    Whoa!! I really like this chapter. Very touching and very emmotionable. Definatly makes up in length.

    I'm very sad right now that Misty is at the brink of death. She's one of my favorite charcters. Please don't let her die. I'd be totally devestated, as I do have an anime crush on her.

    Hope you have the next chapter up soon.

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    Wow! Great job, Water Spirit! This chapter was definitely your best one yet! It was very emotional and dramatical! It kept me on the edge of my seat the entire time!
    The description was magnificent! I could easily picture the scenes in my mind! Keep it up, this fic is AWESOME!
    *thinks of strangling Water Spirit for even thinking about closing up this thread* XD

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    Wow! Great chapter Water Spirit! This defenitly makes up for length, and you just left me haning at the end! I hope Misty is alright. This chapter defenitly brought out Ash's emotions for Misty. It must be horrible for him right now thinking that he might have just lost his two best friends in the world. I loved how you made May think of that portrait when Ash dived in after misty. 10/10 Keep it up
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    Greatest chapter yet. I don't care about the length as long as it has some action etc. in it!

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    YAY! Reviews! I'm glad I've made up for the length though and it's nice to receive such positive comments!

    Originally posted by --Little Wings--

    *Silence while mouth is wide open* ..... Cliffhanger - Must - contain - urge - to - panic. Misty?! The suspense is unbearable!

    What can i say Water Spirit, but WOW I am blown away by this fic. I'm sorry for not posting my thoughts on your last few Chapters, i should have been here more! ;_;
    That last chapter was so exiting, i could not take my eyes off it. It really sucked you into the story, which is one reason your fic is so great. Misty better be alright. As for Ash, i really could imagine him reacting like that in the last two chapters. Poor boy, can you imagine how he would react if he really did think Misty was dead? I loved the suspense, the shippyness, May having that flashback about the Portrait and the way you portraid just how strong Ash's feelings were for Misty. It was really touching, and i felt really emotional.

    I LOVED LOVED LOVED it. Your fanfic is one of the best AAMRNs i honestly have ever read =D *Jumps around* I can't wait for the next chapter, and i hope you can take a laptop with you Water Spirit, because we can't live without your fic Don't worry if you can't though, we promise to keep looking out. Awwwww i just want to see what happens to Misty! ;.; If she's okay, (Which i think she will be) i can't wait to see Ash's reaction when she wakes up. Shippyness galore! I will love it ^.~
    Just don't let her die, because i'd be devastated!
    *Hugs Water Spirit for making my day*
    Awww! *hugs --Little Wings-- back* Thank you for reviewing! Hearing everyone's comments and reviews are what really make my day! And your review was really sweet and I'm glad your enjoying it! Don't worry about not posting in a while, I'm just glad you do take the time to post when you can to let me know what you think! Thank you!

    ****SPOILERS - READ AT YOUR OWN RISK****

    Just to let everyone know, I don't intend to finish this fic anytime soon! I still have a lot more planned for everyone, which could extend as far as the Houen League! But that does not clarify anything for Misty's health and status.

    ***END SPOILERS****

    Originally posted by pokeplayer984

    I'm very sad right now that Misty is at the brink of death. She's one of my favorite charcters. Please don't let her die. I'd be totally devestated, as I do have an anime crush on her.
    Awww, please don't be sad! *hugs pokeplayer tightly* I planned for this chapter to get emotional but I didn't think it was that bad! Maybe I should put a warning up? I can't say what will happen to her because that would spoil it for those who haven't read it and it would also spoil it for the next chapter, but I am very tempted to say Misty ******************, but unfortunately I can't because it will give it away. I will try and get the next chapter up asap though. Now I want to see big smiles!

    Originally posted by WaterBlaster

    Wow! Great job, Water Spirit! This chapter was definitely your best one yet! It was very emotional and dramatical! It kept me on the edge of my seat the entire time!
    The description was magnificent! I could easily picture the scenes in my mind! Keep it up, this fic is AWESOME!
    *thinks of strangling Water Spirit for even thinking about closing up this thread* XD
    *backs away from WaterBlaster so as not to tempt her even more* LOL Only joking!

    Thank you for your review WaterBlaster! It's really sweet of you! I was hoping to make it emotional and dramatic just to give it more of an effect for what is yet to come, and from yours and others comments, I think I have achieved that, so thank you. Hehe... I think I'm getting the hang of the suspence thing!

    Originally posted by Shiny Bayleef

    Wow! Great chapter Water Spirit! This defenitly makes up for length, and you just left me haning at the end! I hope Misty is alright. This chapter defenitly brought out Ash's emotions for Misty. It must be horrible for him right now thinking that he might have just lost his two best friends in the world. I loved how you made May think of that portrait when Ash dived in after misty. 10/10 Keep it up
    Thank you! Although I don't own the rights of Pokemon, I speak on behalf of Ash as the writer of this fic to your statement. Yes, Ash is feeling lost, confused and tortured by the fact that he has lost two of his best friends, but he will soon realise that he may have to sacrifice being for one friend in order to help the another. That's all I'm going to say on that! Hmm... maybe I should have put that in spoilers... meh.

    And thanks for your review Dark Tyranitar! It means a lot!

    Some of you have commented on May talking about the painting. Out of curiosity, did that stand out to blatently or did it flow with the rest of the story? I thought that it would be good to add it in but I wasn't sure if it flowed with what was happening in the story. Opinions? Please discuss.

    Thanks to everyone who has reviewed and please to let me know what you think of it if you haven't already done so! Or if you just have a general question about the fic, please ask!

    Thank you

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    I love it! It's the best chapter yet! I totally love it specially since it haves a little of everything like action, dramatic, suspense, etc!

    I WILL KILL ALONG WITH WB IF YOU EVER THINK TO CLOSE THIS THREAD!!!!!!!!!! XD

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    *Sobs*. Please Misty. Be ok. How would Ash feel. ^-^

    Well, that was an excellent chapter and it was great in length. It is great how you portrayed the characters emotions so well. Emotion is what makes a good fic.

    I hope for Ash's (and of coures our) sakes that Misty will be ok.

    Well done. Keep it up.

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    Wow. I am totally speechless with amazement. This is definately the best chapter yet! I love how you built up the suspence and everything about it. I noticed a few typos and grammer errors but other than that it was truly amazing!! Please, please, please writre anotherr chapter soon!!!!
    I love you fic! Keep up the great writing!

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    as per always a good chapter, no complaints here!

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    That was so beatiful!
    Very good chapter
    I can't wait chapter 11!

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    OOO I was a great fan fic!!! I am just loving yours!!! Hope you keep up the good work!!!!

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    Simply put, awesome. And did I say, "Awesome?" When in doubt, re-read the sentence.

    Amazing...! This is by far the best chapter yet. The suspense is killing me! lol. I hope Misty makes it. She's by far my favorite female character.

    *Gives Water Spirit a congratulatory hug for doing a much anticipated and superb job on Chapter 10*

    I'd like to point out this below in closure to my review of Chapter 10.
    Quote Originally Posted by Water Spirit, near the end of Chapter 10
    “Me too.” Brock agreed confidently. “Misty’s are best friend and we’re not going leave her when she needs us the most.”
    I believe "are" should be "our" there. No worries though!

    Keep up the outstanding work!

    ~Shawn
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    ..........omg...........I dont know what to say. Im just...sighx..so speechless. I know everyone said this already but...its gotta be said. This was the best chapter I read so far. For right now, I feel like your story has been the best story I ever read from all the fanfics I read (and I read a lottttt). I just cant...believe that...you can be sooo good for a first. You are a true born writer and I dont know how I would have lived without ever reading this fanfic. I dont know how imma react after a longggg wait for the next chapter. I think this is the first fic that I actually yelled "AHHH..NOOOO" when I saw the words "End Chapter 10". I SERIOUSLY dont know how imma live for waiting for this story.

    ahhh...I just..GOD...cant believe this. This is just so good of a story that its so hard to put it into words that would sound better. I actually wanna cry cause I finished chapter 10 and now I have to wait for 11. Now, I can officially never ever stop reading this story. This story was so long but I finished it so quick and I wish I didnt.

    OMG WATER SPIRIT!! this is just too much...my heads gonna explode if i keep continue chanting on about how good your story is. I know its getting annoying from me but I just cant help it after reading such an amazing story.

    sighx..please please please please hurry with the next chapter. I mean you capture the characters reaction just the way I would have hoped it and it seems just like the anime. While I was reading this, I actually saw it as a show on the pokemon series. It was soooo touching and emotional and I loved how Ash reacted and stuff. I actually feel Ash's pain and how he's feeling at this point and i can see whats going on in my head from reading it so clearly

    I actually read this story 3 times already and Im just loving it more and more. I cant believe im so attached to a story but I think you're the first that i ever done this to

    I feel sooooooooooo bad for all the advanceshippers cause they probably wont read this and they will be missing a hell of a lot. Im soooooo glad that you're a pokeshipper or else I would miss such a good story.

    If this is your first fic, I can not wait till you write a new story (if you ever do) cause im sure it will be just as good as this or even better. I just cant imagine a story better than this though so I cant not wait. ehhe..right now i'll be saying how I want the next chapter to come up soon but then when it does, I will be upset since I would have to wait for the next one. i would seriously cry when this story ends. You can be sure that I will be back to read all the chapters over again when this story ends
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    Wow! That chapter has to be the most suspenceful and overall best chapter I've ever read in any story. Congratulations Water Spirit! Even though I'm more of a Hoennshipper than AAML fan, I still like Misty and, like everyone else, would be devastated if the unthinkable should happen. Keep up the good work! Oh, and as I'm starting to reply to more and more fan-fics, could you please PM me when a new chapter is posted?

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    OMG...this is really really good Water Spirit, i almost cried it was that touching. You a such a brilliant writer,the portrayal of Ash and Misty are soo good. Its like watching a really good episode, and i am being serious. I am soo happy they got to the Pokemon center in time (Center is how Australians spell it) Misty has to get better!

    Awesome, just awesome
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    Wow! I don't think I've ever received this many reviews for a Chapter before! Thank you!

    [Originally posted by Keira

    I WILL KILL ALONG WITH WB IF YOU EVER THINK TO CLOSE THIS THREAD!!!!!!!!!! XD [/QUOTE]

    Hmmm.... I'm actually getting kinda nervous by all these death threats. LOL only joking. I promise that I won't close down this thread and I will keep writing to the very end so that my loyal supporters can finish it if they want to... but I don't see the end anywhere in my sight... is that a good thing for you?

    Thank you Blazing Charmander, Saya, flaming Charizard, Peach and Water_Master for your reviews! I hope that you, along with everyone else, will continue reading and reviewing for me!


    Originally posted by Shawn

    *Gives Water Spirit a congratulatory hug for doing a much anticipated and superb job on Chapter 10*

    I'd like to point out this below in closure to my review of Chapter 10.
    Quote:
    Originally Posted by Water Spirit, near the end of Chapter 10
    “Me too.” Brock agreed confidently. “Misty’s are best friend and we’re not going leave her when she needs us the most.”

    I believe "are" should be "our" there. No worries though!
    Awww! *hugs Shawn back gratefully* Thank you! Yeah, your right about that typo and thanks for pointing it out. I'll make sure to be more careful when reading through and checking it.

    Woah! What can I say xsweet_peax but that is one heck of a long review! But I'm not complaining! Please don't be disheartened by the delay in chapters! If your excited about reading it but then you feel depressed after because you've finished it, then at least you'll have the excitment of waiting for another one but you know that you can at least predict what will happen next for fun! But please don't feel depressed, unfortunately everything in life must come to an end at some point, but I can assure you that I don't see the end of this fic anytime soon! You've read it 3 times already?! Cool! Awww! You really are sweet! But I'm sure that you've read better fics than mine!

    BTW, I have nothing against Advanceshippers reading this fic but yeah, I do think that they will probably be put off because this is an AAML (or AAMRN as most of you have told me!) but then again I have a wonderful audience to write for! I've got a lovely group of people who appreciate it as a fic and another fantastic group of Pokeshippers who I can share my ideas with on how I would like Misty to return and her adventures with the group! So I think I should show you a lot more gratitude but I really don't know how! If it wasn't for everyone who reads and reviews this, then I wouldn't be here to continue writing this fic for you and I'm very grateful to you all for allowing me this oppertunity (OMG that sounded so formal!). But seriously, I really wish there was a way for me to show how much I appreciate you guys reading and reviewing my fic - and with such positive comments. Thank you to everyone.

    And just to clarify, this is my first ever fanfic and I am privaliged to post it to an audience as great as you are! I hope that I don't let you down and I will do my very best to keep it as close to the anime as possible and to write it for your entertainment. Aww, xsweet_peax there is no need to cry when it ends, I'm sure that I'll write another fanfic but let's wait and see how well I do with this one!

    No probs about the PM thing rust321, just glad your enjoying the fic and please keep on readin' & reviewin'!

    Hi Mystical Angel! Thanks for the compliments and I hope that you will keep on reading this fic and letting me know what you think of it! Yep, I'm also a BIG Pokeshipper, which is probably one of the reasons why I wrote this fic.

    Chapter 11 is well underway, and I will TRY and get it up before the end of the week at the latest. Just let me get rid of this H/W and throw a couple of coursework essays onto the marking pile... I'll shut up now. I'll get Chapter 11 up asap.

    By the way, some of you said that I stuck to the anime really well in this fic. That's strange coz I really thought I strayed a bit on this chapter... guess not!

    And anyone who hasn't reviewed yet please do! As always, if you have any Q's that you'd like A then just ask!

    THANK YOU TO EVERYBODY!!!!

    Luv

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    I'm new here and I just read your fic and it's AWESOME!!! It's got everything in it from drama to action to *starts to ramble on.* I can't wait till chapter 11. Keep up the good work. ^-^

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    Hiya Avalanche! Welcome to the Serebii Forums and thank you for reviewing my story. I hope that you will continue reading my fic and posting comments about what you think of it. Have fun!

    Water Spirit
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    P.S. Like I said before, Chapter 11 should be up asap!

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