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    omg the first ikarishipping fic on these forums!! and my first fic ever!! =D ok anyways this fic is ikarishipping rated (PG13) for mild language soon to come and if there is anymore information needed please tell me =)

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    The hidden town of Futaba has remained a secret as long anyone could remember. Though it is a mystery if such a place exists, there is a legend that depicts the town as a small happy town with very few villagers and a beautiful castle made of diamonds and pearls near the north end of the town. The castle is said to be filled with riches to no end, and a kind family has shared their riches with the villagers for generations.

    People from all over the world have searched in vain for the small town and the riches of its castle. No one has ever found the enigmatic place yet, or even proof of its existence. Yet the town is still under constant attack from all people of the earth.

    But one fateful day, an evil soul had found the answer and all Futaba’s secrets had fallen into the wrong hands...

    This is it...” A young pirate thought as he approached the pedestal.

    A golden light shone from the treasure chest the pirate had searched for all his life. He pulled out a wrinkled piece of paper from his grayish torn pants. Strange inscriptions had been written on the old piece of paper ages ago.

    I am the first to decipher and even find this old piece of junk..” the pirate thought to himself. “No other scholars could have deciphered it even if they did find it.” A confident smile passed his face for a second.

    He stood in front of the chest and hoped he had deciphered right. “Ouvrez-vous dans le nom de Hikari, princesse de Futaba!” He spoke loudly and clearly.

    The treasure chest let out a creaking sound and opened slowly, revealing an old scroll with golden handles. A smirk crossed the pirate’s already intimidating face as he walked forward to retrieve the scroll.

    The minute he touched the scroll, a huge earthquake began to sound, and the ice cave the young pirate had been in started to cave in. But he was well-prepared. Such intelligence and strength should not have been given to one with such evil intentions. Sharp ice stalagtites started to fall from the ceiling. The pirate lifted his hand towards the ceiling, and a blast of fire shot out of his hand in strange pattern.

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    The ice cave had completely collapsed as the horrified pirates looked on from their ship in the ocean.

    “Our captain was in there!” One of the pirates yelped. “How dare he! He promised us fortunes!” Another yelled.

    The pirates on the ship had begun a big fight over their presumed dead captain except for the youngest, who still could not believe his captain was dead. “How could you leave me like this?” He asked staring into the mist of the crumbled ice cave. As his eyes began to water, a dark shadow materialized from the mist, and the small pirate looked on to see his captain walking back to the ship.

    “Look! The Captain! He’s alive!” The pirates cheered as their leader made his way back to the ship.

    “Of course I’m alive. Did any of you doubt me?” the captain asked glaring boldly at his crew.

    “I sure didn’t captain!” The youngest pirate gave the captain a big hug.

    “I know you didn’t, Marcel.” The captain smiled fondly. He quickly regained his hard look and ordered the rest of his crew to make dinner.

    “I knew you could do it brother!” Marcel cheered. “But how did you get past all those traps in the cave?”

    The captain sighed and pulled his little brother on his lap. “Remember that old piece of paper we found at that deserted island?”

    “I sure do brother!” Marcel squealed. “You saved Jacques from that huge Sharpedo remember!”

    “I remember.” The captain chuckled, “Anyways, the paper said that the treasure could only be given to ‘the one with the Power of the Land.’ I don’t know about land but wouldn’t you think that someone that can do this can get through those caves?”

    The Captain pointed to the dark sky, and miles away, wheels of fire began to dance in the sky. Marcel giggled, knowing that his brother was only luring away the people trying to arrest his captain for theft.

    “Didn’t I tell everyone I could do it?” The captain smiled.

    “You sure did!” Marcel mischievously tugged on the captain’s short purple hair. “You sure did Shinji...”

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    great so that's it..i know it sucks but reviews and suggestions would be nice =)

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    2nd half of prologue =) Meeting Hikari



    A piercing squeal shook the crystal castle, frightening hundreds of butlers and maids.

    “Oh my goodness! Mother, I can’t believe this!” A pretty young girl jumped for joy at the sight of the red box her mother presented to her. “Please Hikari,” the girl’s mother pleaded, “You’ll wake up Ribbons.” But the bluish gray family pet stayed asleep on the coral rug, paying no attention to Hikari or her mom.

    “Oh, that old Nyaruma is fine!” Hikari giggled, “Right, sweetheart?”

    The old cat just yawned and went back to sleep. Hikari gave Ribbons a snack then swam back to her mother and her new birthday present.

    Wow I wonder what Mother got me this year.” Hikari wondered, “This is my best birthday ever. I can’t imagine life without my mother.” Hikari smiled at took a look at the numerous boxes stacked right behind her. “The villagers are very supportive too.” Hikari thought. “I could buy another cave with all those gifts.

    It was true. Hikari’s family was so popular in the small town of Futaba for being good rulers of their mermaid race. Their precious city was hidden in a huge triangle shaped boulder buried deep under the sands of the ocean. There is only a small hole in the tip of the boulder that peeks above the surface and allows sunlight in, but the interior walls of the boulder are paved with precious metals reflecting and amplifying the small ray of sunlight in many directions, illuminating the entire cave. At night, the great castle of Futaba glows vividly from the servant’s Lanturns lurking in the castle and the town of Futaba sleeps peacefully with a vast aurora circling the town, almost as if it’s protecting the peaceful town from intruders. They also have a secret entrance out of the city, but only Hikari knows about that.

    “Well, are you going to open your present?” Her mother reminded her.

    Hikari snapped out of her trance, and untied the sparkling white ribbon on her birthday present. She tore away the bright red wrapping paper and opened the white box it concealed.

    “Mother.. it’s beautiful...” Hikari sighed enchantedly. “It’s gorgeous! Where did you get it?” She held up the beautiful pearl necklace that was hidden in the box.

    “Remember the stories grandma always told you?” her mother giggled.

    “Those old fairytales?!?” Hikari scoffed. “They weren’t true! How could somebody have the powers of the oceans or marry the prince of the land? Are there even such things as humans? I’m sure any mermaid down here would rather kiss a Feebas.”

    “Oh quiet! They could be true. It is an old legend.” Her mother quieted her. “Anyways, Grandmother had that nice friend with the tank of Clampearls. He took the best he had and made a perfect necklace just for your birthday.”

    “Wow that’s so sweet of him.” Hikari dreamed. She held the necklace up to her chest. “Hey it matches my sea shell hair pins and my shirt too!”

    Hikari carefully locked on her new necklace and admired herself in the mirror. Her white, sea shell hair pins glittered brilliantly against her dark hair and her pearl necklace matched the sea shells in her hair and the white sea shells holding the sleeves of her white dress which came down to what humans would call her "knees." Her dress also contrasted beautifully against her dark tail and hot pink fins. She was easily the most beautiful mermaid in the ocean.

    “Oh my baby is so gorgeous..” Hikari’s mother sighed, “Ok well I’m going go downstairs and make sure all the preparations for your party are ready.”

    Hikari’s mother left Hikari in her quiet room staring at herself in the mirror. She kept staring at her reflection deep in thought then snapped her fingers when she got an idea.

    “I know just the thing!” Hikari exclaimed.

    She twirled around with her arms high above her head, spinning them off to the side. Suddenly, vibrant little bubbles cascaded down from her hands and enhanced her already good looks.

    “There! Now it’s perfect!” Hikari giggled.

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    reviews =) i don't know the name of dresses that come down to your knees..sry =p miniskirt dresses? sry O_o
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    1. Yaaaaaaay! An Ikarishipping fic <3333
    2. I like it, it sounds interesting, the only thing that annoys me with it is that everyone has english names an Hikari and Shinji don't...but that's really minor, and it doesn't drag my attention that far away from the actual story.
    3. I always knew Shinji was a pirate. I need to make a paint photoedit now.

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    It seems interesting but it needs more info. For example, descriptions of the place would be wonderful. Also, connections between the pirate and Shinji should be visible.
    I love Skitty.

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    yayz. Make. More. Pleeeeaaassseeee!

    you have the high honor of presenting the first Ikarishippy fanfic! (i think)

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    yay!! reviews and suggestions!! =)

    Quote Originally Posted by Rugia View Post
    This is really interesting...keep it going, I like it so far
    thank you rugia i will keep going =) (if the biology teacher doesn't kill me =p)

    Quote Originally Posted by Hyourinmaru View Post
    1. Yaaaaaaay! An Ikarishipping fic <3333
    2. I like it, it sounds interesting, the only thing that annoys me with it is that everyone has english names an Hikari and Shinji don't...but that's really minor, and it doesn't drag my attention that far away from the actual story.
    3. I always knew Shinji was a pirate. I need to make a paint photoedit now.
    hmm...would it mess up the story too much if i changed shinji's and hikari's names? =p i could edit the first post and change shinji to some other scary name =)

    Quote Originally Posted by Skittygirl View Post
    It seems interesting but it needs more info. For example, descriptions of the place would be wonderful. Also, connections between the pirate and Shinji should be visible.
    more info..got it! =) i'll keep that in mind when making the next chapter. ^_^

    Quote Originally Posted by Artemis Ignitan View Post
    yayz. Make. More. Pleeeeaaassseeee!

    you have the high honor of presenting the first Ikarishippy fanfic! (i think)
    thank you! =) oh and by the way everybody..i think the next chapter will probably not be another chapter but a continued prologue =p since we don't know hikari yet. And if I was too vague with the whole plot, Shinji is the captain of his pirate ship and Marcel is his little brother ^_^ (i never imagined shinji with a little brother though.. O_O o well..) and they promised their whole crew lots of treasure if they helped them find the city of Futaba =) and of course they are pirates and pirates are bad people..so there are always people looking for pirates to hand them to the government for arresting so shinji made wheels of fire appear miles away from them so that all the people would go there and find out that shinji isn't there =p
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    Nicely done,I thought the description of the area was well done. I'd say more,but I'm not good at critiquing fics. xD; I'm looking forward to more!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ed Elric Bunny View Post
    Nicely done,I thought the description of the area was well done. I'd say more,but I'm not good at critiquing fics. xD; I'm looking forward to more!
    aww that's ok =) and i have a somewhat "spoiler" or something you might want to know about the fic ^_^

    oh i might start a pm list too ..so if u want to be added...yes just ask

        Spoiler:- why shinji can shoot fire from his hands and why bubbles come out of hikari's:
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    hmmn...cute charm you say? what an interesting plot twist...

    *~second part of prolouge*~

    so we finally get to meet Hikari...and she's a mermaid! Didn't see that coming.

    Are there even such things as humans...any mermaid down here would rather kiss a Feebas.
    She'll change her tune once she meets Shinji...nyahaha!
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    She's a mermaid now...that's quite an interesting twist to the usual ditties that SPP members conjure. I smell a pirate invasion and a massive disturbance of privacy coming up in this little town of Futaba.

    The only French pirate I can think of right now is Jean Lafitte. Shinji looks too evil to be French.

    Anyway, Hikari would easily stop a crowd dead in their tracks with her looks.

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    Yay for making Hikari a mermaid <3. I love mermaids =D
    Anyway, this is very interesting, very different to the usual shipping stories I read.
    It's good, keep going!

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    Hikari as a mermaid? That sounds so cool especially how you described her. Keep up the good work. I didnt find any spelling mistakes either so thats good. Oh yes, I have an idea for the next chapter: Shinji see's a strange figure in the distance while on hos ship (its Hikari btw).
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    Quote Originally Posted by Artemis Ignitan View Post
    hmmn...cute charm you say? what an interesting plot twist...

    *~second part of prolouge*~

    so we finally get to meet Hikari...and she's a mermaid! Didn't see that coming.



    She'll change her tune once she meets Shinji...nyahaha!
    haha u bet =) yup hikari's a mermaid ^_^

    Quote Originally Posted by Kupomaster View Post
    She's a mermaid now...that's quite an interesting twist to the usual ditties that SPP members conjure. I smell a pirate invasion and a massive disturbance of privacy coming up in this little town of Futaba.

    The only French pirate I can think of right now is Jean Lafitte. Shinji looks too evil to be French.

    Anyway, Hikari would easily stop a crowd dead in their tracks with her looks.
    oh yeah i was too lazy to make up an ancient language so i used french O_o sry!! so hikari's french..and shinji thinks its some kind of ancient barbaric language sry for the confusion =p

    Quote Originally Posted by Hyourinmaru View Post
    Yay for making Hikari a mermaid <3. I love mermaids =D
    Anyway, this is very interesting, very different to the usual shipping stories I read.
    It's good, keep going!
    thank you! =) i made hikari a mermaid just because her starter was a water type ^_^

    Quote Originally Posted by Skittygirl View Post
    Hikari as a mermaid? That sounds so cool especially how you described her. Keep up the good work. I didnt find any spelling mistakes either so thats good. Oh yes, I have an idea for the next chapter: Shinji see's a strange figure in the distance while on hos ship (its Hikari btw).
    wow that's a good idea..im not sure if i'll use it in the next chapter but i definately will use it
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    Ooh, this reminds me of the Little Mermaid. I'm glad the first Ikari fic actually has a unique story I can't wait for the first chapter^^

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    it i OK lol but a little ermmmm
    it dose not make sense can you explain the storyline pls?

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    hey guys sorry for not posting for so long/not working on the fic =(

    Quote Originally Posted by Angel_of_freedom View Post
    I think it's pretty good so please write more.
    thank you angel! i will =)

    Quote Originally Posted by Rugia View Post
    Ooh, this reminds me of the Little Mermaid. I'm glad the first Ikari fic actually has a unique story I can't wait for the first chapter^^
    thanks, sorry for the long wait =(

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    it i OK lol but a little ermmmm
    it dose not make sense can you explain the storyline pls?
    yes i know ='( i promise it will make sense as the story progresses but for right now, all you need to know is the little town of futaba is a hidden town filled with alot of treasures, all humanity had done everything they could to get to the treasure & shinji was the only one who could decipher the clues, shinji is a pirate on every wanted poster because he's a pirate...he steals stuff =p and hikari is the princess of futaba and it was her birthday
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    sorry to double post..

    and chapter 1 of the fic is still the same rating. sorry to take so long..school is getting really hard with finals and everything and this is my first year taking finals so please...don't rush me =) and thank you for your patience and we also have a fanart by skittygirl of hikari =)

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    Chapter 1 The Party

    “NOO!!! Please No! Don’t!!”

    An old man cried as a fierce band of pirates started to haul away his cargo. The brutal pirates just ignored the man as another pirate finished tying him up.

    “You just don’t shut up do you?” The pirate snickered. “Look we’re just gonna borrow your stuff for a little while and if we feel like it, we’ll give it back later.”

    “OH NOOO YOU DON’T!!” the old man exploded. “YOU WILL GET OUT OF MY SHOP, LEAVE MY CONCOCTIONS AND REPORT YOURSELVES TO-..”

    “SHUT UP OLD MAN!!” One of the pirates cut him off and swiftly flung a dagger towards the old man’s direction. The old man gasped in fear as the dagger skimmed across his head and stabbed the wall above him. The old man wheezed out some inaudible cries for his shop and then slowly fainted. The pirates went up in a roar of laughter.

    “Haha! Nice one Pete!” A pirate snickered.

    “Yeah, that’s one way to shut a land lubber up!” Another pirate mocked.

    “Ok we had our fun guys! Let’s go! We have everything we need!” announced the main pirate.

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    (Meanwhile back on the ship)

    Holy Huntail! What the heck is taking them so long?” Shinji thought to himself. “A few potions, herbs and some roots, that’s what I told them right? What did they do? Raid the whole island?

    “Capt’n! We’re back!!” A voice called out from the distance.

    “Hmm?” Shinji stood up from the mast he was leaning against. Groups of pirates approached the ship.

    “Hey captain! We got the stuff you wanted us to get!” called one of the pirates.

    “Yeah but we were tired of stale fish and bread so we got some fresh ones from this other shop” another pirate yelled.

    “And fresh water! The stuff we have is growing mold!!” Another pirate shouted.

    “Here’s some better pots and pans for the kitchen!” “And firewood!” “Soap for the cabin boys!” Many others shouted out their success.

    “Wow they really did raid the whole island.” Shinji whispered to himself with surprise. “Quiet everybody! Gather your loot and bring it on board! We have no time to lose!” Shinji ordered them.

    The horde of pirates quickly loaded all their goods on their ship and set sail again. As the pirates squabbled on the deck, following the orders given to them, Shinji stood at the front of his ship examining the old map he found at the ice cave:

    Turn east towards the island,
    Sail through the sharks,
    Sink to the bottom,
    Now look to your heart


    Look to your heart? What does that have to do with getting to Futaba?” Shinji wondered in frustration. “We went east to the island, but what do sharks and hearts have anything to do with directions? Ugh.. This map is so pathetic. I could just burn this piece of junk up!” Shinji hand started to flare as he kept thinking but he caught himself before he scorched his most important link to the legendary town.

    “CAPT’N!!! WE HAVE A PROBLEM!”

    Shinji awoke from his trance to see the ocean full of sharpedos attacking his ship. “Sail through the sharks?” A sea of ideas rushed though his head like a wave crashing the shore of a beach. Shinji raised his hand towards the clouds above and his crew watched as the clouds began to get dark. Raindrops started to fall and electricity coursed through the clouds. Shinji swiftly snapped his fingers down towards the ocean and a surge of Thunder followed his movements and shocked all sea creatures near his ship. The crew of pirates watched their captain paralyze all the sharpedo attacking the ship and cowered in fear. Marcel however stood above the rest of them and admired how his brother could shock the sea creatures and protect the ship from his thunder at the same time.

    The sharpedos swam away from the surface. The pirates began to cheer their captain but Shinji knew what would happen next.

    “Quickly! Marcel get everyone to drink the potions that Max prepared!” Shinji ordered.

    “But capt’n! We want to celebrate your- ” Marcel started to protest.

    “I don’t care!! Do it now!!!” Shinji shouted.

    Suddenly the ship began to rock. The ship started to spin in circles and the water underneath the ship began to part.

    Sink to the bottom...” Shinji thought.

    Everyone rushed down to the bottom of the ship to drink their glass of potion. It was a special potion that Max had made that would help them breathe underwater. Everyone had finished their glass of potion except for Shinji. Marcel quickly ran up to the deck where his brother was.

    “Shinji! Drink!! We’re going to drown!!” Marcel cried.

    Shinji took the glass from his brother and chugged it down quickly. Marcel’s terrified cries did not faze his concentration.

    “Now look to your heart.. I wonder...” Shinji thought. He pulled his hand from his brother who was yanking it persistently and walked to the center of the ship. The ship started to shake a little more violently. Marcel fell back to the sides of the ship but Shinji retained his balance and bowed his head. He then lifted his hands up into a praying fashion.

    “What is he doing? He must have some kind of way to save us..” Marcel thought, calming down.

    Bands of fire started to circle Shinji as he raised his head and opened his eyes. The bands of fire then encircled the ship and the ship stopped rocking. They sank slowly down to the bottom of the ocean with Shinji’s crew cheering him once again.

    “Our capt’n has saved us all!” Pete exclaimed. “Three cheers for the mighty Shinji!”

    “HIP HIP HOORAY!!” the whole crew shouted.

    “Thanks guys.” Shinji quickly pushed away the praise. “Now everybody listen up! This is the moment we’ve all been waiting for. The town of Futaba and all it’s riches are all inside this boulder.” Shinji tapped the huge boulder the ship sank next to. “I will need everybody to get all the weapons and armor and get ready for a war. Don’t be scared. These people live in a rock! They don’t have to fight anybody so they don’t have the weapons that we do. Sure they may have a rake or a shovel but that’s what we’ve got our armor for. Raid Futaba of all its riches and we will rise back up to the surface and sell all their goods. Did you hear me? I want all their riches! Every last one of them...”

    The pirates cheered as an evil grin swept across Shinji’s face.

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    “Hey Nozomi? Does this make-up make my eyes look weird?” Hikari asked.

    “Well just a little, let me fix it up for you.” Nozomi grabbed a make up brush nearby.

    “It was really nice of you to come early to my birthday party just to help me with my hair and make up.” Hikari closed her eyes.

    “Hey what are best friends for?” Nozomi brushed on some more silver eye shadow on Hikari’s lids. “Hey speaking of friends, is that Ash dude really going to ask you out today?”

    “Oh no Nozomi! Not that again!” Hikari moaned.

    “Sorry I couldn’t help it.” Nozomi giggled. “He’s just so desperate! But I’d be desperate too if I were a guy.”

    “Haha.. Funny..There really just doesn’t seem to be any nice guys down here. Well I mean guys that actually like you as a person. Not as a princess of Futaba.” Hikari sighed.

    “Hey girl, there’s plenty of fish in the sea right? You’ll find somebody!” Nozomi winked. “I love your hair can I curl it?”

    “Sure!” Hikari smiled. “And I love your necklace! I have a dress that goes with that. Hang on one second. ”

    By the time Hikari and Nozomi had finished getting ready, the party had started and the butlers were running back and forth with refreshments and napkins.

    “Wow. You really keep ‘em busy huh?” Nozomi giggled.

    “Oh yes we do.” Hikari smiled. “But they are such hard workers and we appreciate everything they do for us.” She talked loudly enough so all the chiefs and butlers could hear her in the kitchen and dining room. They all smiled at her and welcomed her and Nozomi into the garden.

    “She’s such a sweet girl.” One of the maids commented.

    After a while of talking and frolicking in the garden the two mermaids swam up to the balcony to relax and try to avoid all the gentlemen asking them to dance.

    “It sure gets tiring being so popular huh Hikari?” Nozomi laughed.

    “Tell me about it.. Hey! Let’s go to my room! There’s no one there except Ribbons!” Hikari suggested.

    “Good idea let’s go! I need a break.” Nozomi followed her friend into her room.

    They got tired after greeting so many guests and avoiding all the cheesy guys. They really weren’t expecting anybody in Hikari’s room but Nozomi opened the door to find a nicely dressed young man with black hair sitting on Hikari’s bed with a bouquet of flowers. Both girls screamed in surprise and tripped over each other in shock.

    “Whoa! Excuse me ladies! I didn’t want to scare you!” The young man chuckled.

    “Nice to see you too, Ash.” Nozomi greeted sarcastically. “What are you doing in my room?” Hikari asked him slightly annoyed.

    “I just wanted to wish my favorite girl a happy birthday!” Ash grinned and presented his bouquet, completely unaware of the girls' annoyed tones. “I got coral roses! Your favorite.”

    “Thank you Ash that’s very sweet of you..” Hikari hastily thanked him and took the bouquet.

    “Oh yes Hikari, There was something else I wanted to ask you.” Ash added on slyly.

    Nozomi’s eyes opened wide as Hikari tried her best to get out of the situation. “Oh well I uh.. I’m a little...uh..”

    Before Ash could speak, a rumbling sound filled the castle and shrill screams could be heard from downstairs.

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    haha..ok so i suck at poems.. =p im sorry sorry it's so short...sorry for everything!! =p but if you would still rate & review, you'll be on santa's nice list for christmas ^_^
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    well worth waiting for! Great job! Although I'm not to pleased with this one-sided Pearlshipping included, but meh, that's Pokeshipping bias for you. Will be looking forward to next chappie!

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    Yay~ an update!
    I liked this chapter, you're keeping the characters in character so far and the grammar is good. Nozomi being in the story is awesome, and the one-sided Pearlshipping will be interesting. There was a few places where I saw that you could use a comma, but everything else was good. I hope Nozomi has alot more screentime (is that the right word? XD) in the fic. I'm looking forward to chapter 2~.

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    EYO!!!!Well, this is my first time reviewing ur story(but I reviewed too much on fanfiction.net!!!!HEHE!!!!)And I would like that this Ikari fic(first!!)isn't cruddy!!!!And I appreciate that!!!Pls. continue this fic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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    Quote Originally Posted by Artemis Ignitan View Post
    well worth waiting for! Great job! Although I'm not to pleased with this one-sided Pearlshipping included, but meh, that's Pokeshipping bias for you. Will be looking forward to next chappie!
    yeah ash is gonna be...slightly out of character in this fic >_< sorry =(

    Quote Originally Posted by Hyourinmaru View Post
    Yay~ an update!
    I liked this chapter, you're keeping the characters in character so far and the grammar is good. Nozomi being in the story is awesome, and the one-sided Pearlshipping will be interesting. There was a few places where I saw that you could use a comma, but everything else was good. I hope Nozomi has alot more screentime (is that the right word? XD) in the fic. I'm looking forward to chapter 2~.
    more commas and more nozomi! got it =)

    Quote Originally Posted by honey_clover112 View Post
    EYO!!!!Well, this is my first time reviewing ur story(but I reviewed too much on fanfiction.net!!!!HEHE!!!!)And I would like that this Ikari fic(first!!)isn't cruddy!!!!And I appreciate that!!!Pls. continue this fic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    thank you...it's very hard keeping up with this fic and my life O_o i'll try my best! (although i not exactly the best student in english class >_<)

    and i am now officially having a poll! =D i'm wondering whether or not to change futaba to the english name     Spoiler:- english name for futaba:
    because     Spoiler:- english name for futaba town:
    doesn't sound like a town that would be found under the sea O_o
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    Nah! I think you just leave it as Futaba! t sounds more......um.....good????


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    Quote Originally Posted by honey_clover112 View Post
    Nah! I think you just leave it as Futaba! t sounds more......um.....good????
    and! ...it's staying like Futaba since nobody else voted =p again..everybody...sorry for long waits. My grandpa died during new years and i was getting a little writers block =p sorry. It seems every accident possible is occuring when it comes to this fic =p I really wanted to get a new chapter in, so i didn't really check for spelling or grammar. sorry!

    Chapter 2 The Invasion

    “There’s the main entrance to the city and there’s the secret back door right here.” Shinji explained. “Pete, you and your group will go through the main tunnel and ambush the city from there.” Shinji had asked his little brother to stay with Max on their ship.

    “Aye capt’n!” Pete nodded with approval. He then turned toward his group to tell the group his plan to ambush Futaba and ordered them towards the main tunnel.

    Oh god I totally forgot about Pete’s pea-sized brain!” Shinji thought aghast. “PETE! PLEASE! USE YOUR FRIGGIN HEAD THIS TIME! Don’t attack any of the villagers! They could have weapons that even we don’t know about! Just do something to catch everybody’s attention!”

    Pete sulked in embarrassment, “All right guys change of plan!” He led his group to the main entrance.

    “Ugh..” Shinji rolled his eyes in shame. “Jacques! Lead your crew to the back entrance! Which is right here!” Shinji led them to a small rock with small pearls embedded in a strange pattern that looked like a triton. Shinji knelt down towards the rock.

    “Open!” he commanded simply running his hand against the pearls.

    Instantly, a small passage in the big boulder opened letting out a sweet scent from inside. The crew silently crept inside until they reached a door which they slightly peaked in through. Inside was a beautiful town with lush green seaweed and small exotic-looking flowers on the ground. The small houses near the main road were made of stone and the main path was made of a fertile looking dark brown soil although no plants grew on the path. At the end of the road was a beautiful crystal castle emitting the seven colors of the rainbow. Several Lanturn and other water pokemon circled the castle as people and music could be heard from the castle’s direction. The pirates took a minute to take everything about the place in.

    “It’s even better than Shinji described!” The pirates mumbled behind Shinji. There was obviously no one near the entrance to the castle, and Shinji could see Pete also peaking through the main entrance.

    Shinji walked completely through the door and signaled Pete to do the same. “Ok guys, take a break! Explore, but don’t introduce yourselves to the people! We ARE still trying to ambush them.”

    The pirates thanked him as they ran all over the town. Shinji watched his crazy family enjoy themselves as he bent down to examine the strange flowers that were scattered throughout the green fields. They were pretty flowers spotting the field with red, pink, gold, and blue and pretty much any other color Shinji could think of at the top of his head.

    Shinji took a closer look at the flowers. “No way! The medicine flowers? These were the flowers that saved my brother from that poisonous Qwilfish. I remember it so clearly. They can heal just about anything! They cured my brother and left the ship smelling like an English woman’s perfume drawer for a month!” Shinji thought with surprise.

    He picked one of the flowers and stood up. As soon as the flower left its stem, a new flower grew in the same place where Shinji had picked. ...Ok. That was interesting.. he thought and brought the flower to his nose. He inhaled the sweet scent of the yellow flower and somehow, the scent brought strength and energy to Shinji’s body. The rest of the pirates seemed to be having the same effect as they crowded around Shinji well rested and waiting for more orders.

    So that’s why it smells so good here. Shinji thought as he dropped the flower on the ground. The flower withered quickly and a new flower sprouted in the same place as quickly as the old one withered.

    “As you all may have noticed, the flowers here have filled this whole town with their scent.” Shinji announced, “And the flower’s scent gives people energy. We were only here for a minute and we thought they were refreshing. But these people have grown up with this scent! They are used to the energy! So everyone be careful when we ambush the castle!”

    A supportive cry was quietly but strongly bellowed from the crew as they surrounded the castle.

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    “Oh yes, Hikari, there was something else I wanted to ask you.” Ash added on slyly.

    “Wait! Ash, don’t...but-I no!” Hikari stuttered uncomfortably.

    Suddenly a rumbling sound was heard from downstairs and Hikari could hear her guests screaming.

    “What in the world is going on down there?!?” Hikari asked, glad for an excuse to push Ash away at the moment.

    Nozomi got up, obviously worried too. “It’s such a horrible noise I’ve never heard anyone scream like this before. In fact, I’ve never heard so many people screaming at one time.” They both swam out the room worried for the guests, and curious to see what was causing the commotion.

    Wow she’s right.” Hikari realized, “No one’s ever screamed like that before. It sounds like they’re scared, or maybe even hurt!” Hikari thought worriedly, her pace quickening as she ran through the long hallway.

    She and Nozomi almost reached the end of the hallway when Hikari’s father burst out of the door, locked it and stood in front of the door with his arms reaching across it to hold it down.

    “NO! Hikari! Nozomi! Don’t go out there! There are intruders! They’ll kill you!” Hikari’s father puffed.

    “Intruders? It can’t be!” Hikari scoffed. “Our ancestors put a spell on this town! No one could undo the locks on the doors until-” Hikari cut herself off. She remembered the second part to the legend of the town that she promised grandmother never to tell.

    That can’t be possible!” Hikari thought in disbelief. “Grandma said that the intruder would honor the town and present us a favor!

    Suddenly two swords shot through the door that Hikari’s father was holding down on both sides of his head. “Children.” The father tried his best to regain his breath. “SWIM!”

    Everyone swam away from the door through the curvy hallway. They were just out of sight when the gang of pirates broke the door down and swam after them.

    Vandalism isn’t exactly what I would call ‘honor.’” Hikari cursed mentally.

    The two mermaids and the merman were so busy swimming away from the pirates, they didn’t even notice that they swam straight into Ash, knocking him aside, until he let out an annoyed “OUCH!”

    “Ash! My boy!” Hikari’s father exclaimed. “Here! You two girls run away! Ash and I will hold them down!”

    “What?! Hold who down?” Ash exclaimed.

    “There’s not enough time to explain!” Hikari’s father persisted.

    “Thanks Dad! Thanks Ash!” Hikari quickly yelped before swimming off with Nozomi.

    Hikari and Nozomi swam for their lives through the curved hallway looking for a window to swim out of. “Wow...I never knew how long our hallways were until now!” Hikari thought to herself. She didn’t have enough time to think much longer when the pirates had finally caught up to them, obviously done with Hikari’s father and Ash.

    “There they are!” The pirates shouted. “Let’s get them!”

    “WAIT!!” Nozomi shouted. All of the pirates stopped on her cue.

    “You can’t hurt us! You have to leave!” Nozomi commanded sternly.

    “And why would we want to do that?!?” One of the pirates jeered at her.

    “Because...” Nozomi talked with a fake confident voice, “I have a great treasure for all of you, but you can’t get it unless I open it to you!” Hikari could tell Nozomi was making everything up on the spot.

    “Yeah? Hand it over lady!” A different pirate commanded.

    “Hold on. It only works if all of you watch me closely.” Nozomi told them nervously.

    She moved her hands in a small strange motion for a very long time. The longer her hands moved, the more interested the pirates got and finally they were all huddled around her hands. Finally she stopped and held one finger near her stomach.

    “Now everybody concentrate on the light!” She commanded motioning to her finger, “The more concentration it gets, the more treasure you will all get!”

    Immediately all of the pirates crouched down and pushed their faces towards her finger. Hikari was still confused as to what Nozomi was doing until she faced her and mouthed the command “get out” to her. Nozomi was the only one who could tell Hikari was crying out of worry but she still swam away while Nozomi kept the stupid pirates occupied.

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    Shinji never entered the castle. He swam above the castle to make sure no one escaped the castle with their loot.

    Now what’s this?

    Out of the highest tower of the castle, a small mermaid in a beautiful pink dress, with matching ribbons in her hair, swam out of the window.

    They seemed to have missed one.” Shinji thought, somewhat annoyed until he swam down and saw her up close.
    His mind started to slip. “She’s not swimming very fast, but that looks like that’s as fast as she can go. By the look on her face, she’s never seen an ambush like this before. She looks scared to death! Maybe no one has ever tried to fight these people at all! Easy target, she looks pretty much defenseless.

    I can handle this one.” Shinji thought with an evil smirk, after subconsciously evaluating his victim.

    About half of the things Shinji thought were absolutely true.

    I’m so scared!” Hikari started to panic. “We have never had people try to attack us before! And this lousy legend fulfillers are the first?!? That makes no sense! I’ve got to get out of here! But I also need to help my people! But if I go back then-

    Hikari’s thoughts were interrupted as a rough hand fiercely grabbed her wrist and gripped it firmly.

    “And where do you think you’re going?” Shinji asked with an evil grin.

    Even though her tail was leveled with his feet, Shinji’s muscular body still towered over Hikari’s small frame. Scared stiff, by the sudden intrusion and unexpected man towering over her, Hikari let out a shrill, alarming scream, letting everybody in the castle know that she was in danger. As soon as the Hikari’s alarm touched the ears of the townsfolk in the castle, all the people’s eyes widened in fear and they stopped everything that they were doing. The pirates stopped too in a split second, curious of the townsfolk reaction to the deafening sound.

    “HIKARI!” The townsfolk cried in horror, “Princess! We’ll save you!”

    Immediately all the townsfolk rushed out of the castle, knocking down the pirates guarding the doors.

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    “AHHHHH!” Hikari continued her scream until Shinji pulled her closer to him, turned her around so her back was facing him and used his other arm to press her neck against his chest and choke her. Hikari’s scream instantaneously died down and weak coughing and squirming replaced the loud scream. Then Hikari started gasping for water under his strong grasp. It did not falter even with Hikari’s other hand fighting against it.

    “Would you shut up?!?” Shinji scolded. “And stop struggling! You’re obviously not winning, so save your energy for something else!”

    Hikari’s struggles weakened and she squeezed his arm in pain.

    “I don’t care if you can’t breathe!” Shinji snapped back a little freaked out by the fact that he understood the message she was giving him.

    “HIKARI! NO!!! DON’T HURT HER!!!!!” The townsfolk swam towards them. “GET YOUR HANDS OFF OF HER! DO YOU HEAR?!?” They all mobbed Shinji until he loosened his grip just enough so Hikari could breathe again.

    As soon as she got her first breath of water, she motioned the townsfolk to move away. As soon as they did, a speedy Aqua Jet shot from Hikari’s hands and aimed straight for Shinji.

    “WHOA WHAT?!?” Shinji managed to block her attack without taking a lot of damage, but she obviously caught him by surprise. He thought he was the only person who could use pokemon attacks. He was very curious to know how she got her powers even though he never gave his powers that much thought.

    I remember when grandpa’s pokemon died, this glowing ball came out of both of them and smacked me right in the chest. Ever since, I’ve been accidentally getting everything I touch on fire or electrocuted.”. Shinji recalled.

    By the time Shinji recovered from his thoughts, His pirates had occupied the townsfolk once more and Hikari had gotten a few feet away from him.

    Now it was time for Hikari to get lost in her thoughts as well, “Wow, and I thought they would never come in handy.” Hikari mused.

    ***Flashback

    “Grandma?” a little Hikari approached her weeping Grandmother. “Grandma? What’s wrong?”

    Grandma lifted her head to see young Hikari, eyes wide with curiosity.

    “It’s nothing, Honey” Grandma smiled, “Enperuto and Mimiroppu are just leaving us now to go to a better place. Come, I’ll make you cookies and I’ll tell you about it.”

    Grandma left the room leaving Hikari with the dying pokemon. Not really sure what was going on, Hikari gave a soft prayer to both of the pokemon before they died. A few seconds later, two bright balls of energy floated out of the two pokemon.

    “Wow! Pretty!” Hikari commented.

    A bright light blue ball came from Enerputo and a bright pink ball was hovering over Mimiroppu. Without warning, both balls flew towards her, striking her in the chest. Ever since then, Hikari could do everything her grandma’s pokemon could do. So instead of telling her about the Pokemon heaven that day, Grandma told her the rest of the sacred legend of Futaba and how there was going to be an outsider who would come and help the town.

    ***End Flashback***

    “PRINCESS HIKARI! LOOK OUT!” One of the townsfolk yelled.

    Hikari quickly snapped out of her flashback and glanced above and behind her at a diagnol to see Shinji engulfed in a white aura body in a position for an attack coming towards her fast. Thinking quickly, she used her grandma’s bunny’s attack, Endure an inch before Shinji’s arm made contact with her body.

    The townsfolk cried in despair as Shinji tackled her into the bottom corner of the town’s wall (the inside of the boulder).

    The irridescent wall had a coat of color that intensified the reflected light of the sun and shone many colors in the light, similar to the inside of an abalone shell. Hikari screamed in pain as Shinji tackled her into the corner of the wall and ground with Giga Attack. Suddenly, Shinji’s feelings about her started to change. He felt sad for the helpless creature

    She’s so frail. Why am I picking on her? She never did anything to me! And ...She’s really cute! Oh stop it what am I saying?” Shinji stood still with his arm still across Hikari’s chest where he tackled her. Hikari’s Cute Charm ability had infatuated him.

    Shinji managed to keep his cool and still intimidate the whimpering Hikari. “And that’s what happens when you go against Shinji, captain of the Master of Storms!” He bellowed over her so the rest of the townsfolk could hear him.

    “Unhh.. no..puh..please......please don’t hurt them.” Hikari begged the menacing pirate.

    “Shh! Don’t worry.” Shinji slyly put a finger over her lips, “This will be over before you know it.” He slid his finger slowly down her chin and neck emitting a Thunder Wave to keep her from moving.

    “Uh..Ahh!” Hikari moaned in pain as the electricity coursed through her.

    “Oh, and what’s this?” Shinji slid his finger down her collar bone until he bumped into the necklace that Hikari had gotten for her birthday.

    “No.. Please don’t! ...It was my grandmother’s..... Pleaes don’t tou-”

    “A gift? You shouldn’t have!” Shinji cut her off, yanked her necklace off and put it in his pocket.

    Hikari’s voice started to crack as her protests became weaker. How could all of this had happen so suddenly? And on the worst day possible! “No! I’m sorry Grandma.” Were Hikari’s last feeble words before she fainted.

    Shinji stood up as one of his pirates came back from the ship. “Captain! Our ship is full. We’re gonna have to make another trip.”

    “We can’t do that.” Shinji replied, “They might actually make weapons by then and actually fight us by then.”

    “Captain!” a group of pirates approached Shinji with a tied up, gagged Nozomi over their heads. “We found this girl in the castle and she knows where all of the treasure is! Should we just take her?”

    “Mmmpphhh!! Mmpp!!” Nozomi shook her head and protested through her bounds.

    Shinji looked at Nozomi then at Hikari.

    “We’re taking both...”


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    and i want another poll! =) someone did mention that it was a little annoying how some characters had english names and some have japanese, (ex: Marcel, Shinji) so do you guys want english or japanese names? and if you say one, give a new name for the character too (ex; Hikari = Camille, Shinji = Blake) etc. etc... thank you =)
    my ikarishipping fic!! my first fic ever 3rd chapter now up =)



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    Yay! It's another chapter! It's well writen like the others, of course, and I can't wait for the next! Oh, and about the poll...I think you should keep the old names. It's kinda confusing, and besides, we don't even know their offical English names, so when PUSA finally do reveal their names, wouldn't it be a little confusing? Well, you are the author after all, so come what may, I say.

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    This chapter was well worth waiting for, there's lots of action here! The pirates (except for Shinji and maybe his brother) are so stupid, it's way too funny. The evil mastermind is always accompanied by some stupid henchmen, XD. Anyways, good luck on the next chappie!

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    Man....I was waiting for this.............but it was worth it!!!!!!!! Nice story!(as usual!) I'm waiting for the next chapter!!!!!"and i want another poll! =) someone did mention that it was a little annoying how some characters had english names and some have japanese, (ex: Marcel, Shinji) so do you guys want english or japanese names? and if you say one, give a new name for the character too (ex; Hikari = Camille, Shinji = Blake) etc. etc... thank you =)"-You said... that..........um.....pls. keep the original names!!!!PLS!!!!!!!and......your spelling of please....."Pleaes"-(you put that!!!).....aww...pls correct!!!!THAT IS ALL!!!!!!
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