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    This One-Shot, which I have been working on for many a long time and had been sitting in my head even longer, is for the Myths and Legends One-Shot Contest. Didn't turn out to be quite what I had expected, but I am...content, and I hope it will do. It covered a few too many aspects and didn't go into much detail about each one, but it seems that there's not much else I can do. So I am content.

    So enjoy. Comments, criticism, all of it is more than welcome. Oh, and yes, I love Mewtwo: he is my complex emo boi who I want in between the sheets. Read first, judge me later.



    Starting Anew


    He watched on.

    He watched on, horrified, terrified, by what he saw. Unable to do a thing, unable to find a way to stop the madness.

    The sky was filled with crimson clouds, blocking out all the sun’s light and casting the world in shadow. Hellish fire rained from the sky, scorching everything in its path. The ground opened up and created gaping chasms, swallowing up anything nearby. Fierce gales swept even the heaviest objects off the ground, sending them crashing down miles away. Huge waves crashed on the shore, flooding areas miles around. Lightning flashed across the blood red sky, illuminating the scene below.

    Creatures of every shape and size were running about in panic, trying desperately to escape the natural disasters that took the lives of hundreds every second. The panic was like a disease, spreading like wildfire, affecting humans and Pokémon alike causing them to scream out in desperation, running as if blind, trampling one another in a mad dash to find nonexistent safety. The flames falling from the heavens ignited whatever they touched, consuming plants, buildings, even living creatures, causing them to burn to the ground. An unnatural fear gripped the heart of every living creature, clouding their minds with single one thought: run. Friends had become enemies, blocking all possible escapes, and in their fear some even rung the necks of others. It was mad, and the world no longer made any sense.

    And still, they watched, doing nothing to protect the earth which they had been charged to protect. It was now being destroyed, the natural, yet unnatural calamities killing everything in sight, with none able to hide or protect themselves.

    Doom was imminent.


    He looked about; seemingly calm despite the chaotic scene before his deep, lavender eyes. The creature stood tall and firm despite the appearance of the wiry thin body he had been given, a sickly grey in color, with only a chest plate protecting his upper body. Long, bony arms remained at his sides, the hands with balled fingers curled into fists. A thick purple tail swished slowly behind him, like a snake attempting to hypnotize its prey. He was deep in thought, trying to understand what he was seeing, and why he was feeling things he had never before felt.

    At first glance, Mewtwo seemed almost unfazed, unaffected by what he saw, but looking deeper, his eyes seemed troubled, and his sharp mind was not at peace, but hard at work solving a puzzle. The clone could not understand why, even as he looked down upon a world that had only caused him pain and suffering, that had taken advantage of him, that had refused to see him as anything as a tool, why he pitied them so.



    “It must be done,” the Pokémon announced in a great, booming voice that echoed against the damp cave walls. He spread his grand multicolored wings wide, bright red feathers shining like a million dancing flames. The sharp black eyes of Ho-Oh were upon every creature in the huge cavern, all of whom had gone silent at the phoenix’s words.

    They ranged in colors and sizes, each representing a different element that kept the world in place, each unique, each cherished by humans. No two were the same, and just like they were different in appearance, so were their roles in the world different. The one thing they all shared was an aura of power, of dignity, of wisdom and knowledge gained from their countless years of life. Respected, revered, some even feared by mortal creatures.

    Now each contemplated, and each couldn’t help but feel an intense sorrow. Overwhelming sadness filled the ancient chamber in which the Legendaries had held their Councils, but each was resigned and knew there was no other choice, no way to hide it.

    “It must be done,” Ho-Oh repeated solemnly, dipping his great head and allowing one, single tear to fall from his ruby red eye. The last tear he would shed, with it letting go of his love and attachment for the world.


    The clone had been at the Council, and he knew what would transpire because of it. However, Mewtwo had not spoken up, remaining silent as he watched the other Legendaries each shed a single tear for the world, a pure drop of water fall from each of their eyes. He had remained motionless at the back of the cavern, doing nothing, not once speaking. He had always felt out of place among these god-like creatures, even despite his own power which rivaled most of their own. He had really only been given the privilege to attend the Councils because of his relation to Mew, and it was only because of this similarity in DNA that he had a small say in what was done, smaller than even Latios and his sister. Not to say he was looked down upon- they had been kind to him and welcomed him with open arms, but he knew well that some of the Legendaries were still wary around him.

    Sill, in regards to making this decision, Mewtwo had nothing to say. After all, he had been created by mortals, so who was he to decide their fate?


    Just as he had remained silent at the Council, so he remained silent here. Above the desolation, the fear, the suffering it was harder to understand and believe what was happening below. A nightmarish scene, taking place in a world the Legendaries had breathed life into and that had in turn created him. He did hate the humans for what they had done, or he at least hated the individuals- as he had learned, not all humans were all that bad. But they were all long gone, having died many years ago, and there were no traces of his creation left. Mewtwo had no attachments left in the world, nothing left to which he could feel a connection down below- not to good, nor to bad.

    Yet he still felt an intense sense of pity for them. But…why? After all, this, what was transpiring below, was to benefit the Earth: cleansing it, then starting again.

    Mewtwo sighed. It still seemed almost…wrong. Was this what the world truly deserved?

    The clone’s uneasy thoughts tugged at his mind, but his confusion seemed to reach other ears as well.

    A small, cat-like creature sensed Mewtwo’s thoughts, even from afar. Her short ears seemed to twitch, and she turned her elegant body, covered in fine pink fur to look at him with a large pair of bright sapphire eyes. Mew turned away from her previous perch and floated over to her clone, giving her long whip-like tail a little flick, the ovular shape at the end swishing.

    “You seem troubled, Mewtwo,” she said in his mind, the words ringing clear and pure as a crystal bell.

    He seemed taken aback from her approaching him and speaking- until then, they had all been staring below in silence, each lost in their own private thoughts.

    Mewtwo could never help but find it strange how the two seemed to share a bond, connected like no others. Although it was not great, it was still firm, like a rope tied between the two that despite creating a connection between them, still gave them room to be independent creatures. Of course, Mew did share a slight connection to every living being; she was, after all, the Mother of them all. Every living creature was hers, each loved, and each given a blessing by her that fit the individual. Mewtwo suddenly understood that no matter how much this pained the others, Mew was the one who was most affected, and her pain must run deeper than any other.

    Mewtwo hung his head, closing his eyes. “Yes,” he finally answered. “Though the reason why eludes me.”

    Mew nodded solemnly. “That is unlike you, Mewtwo,” she said gently. “This is the first time you have felt pity, is it not?”

    “Yes, but it makes no sense. The humans and Pokémon below have given me nothing. Only one has brought me anything other than pain, and he is long gone. Not a trace of my existence is left, save a small myth. So why do I…care?”

    Mew paused for a moment, then smiled, more to herself than to him. “Because life, no matter how small, no matter its importance, no matter its weight in the world, is still…wonderful.”

    The clone’s eyes widened in unexplained shock. The words were words that had always rang gently in his head, like a distant whisper on the wind of his thoughts. No more real than a figment, grounded only by a flash of a memory. But with Mew’s words they became persistent suddenly, the always unspoken words seeming real, now. “Mew…” he began, but the little Legendary merely smiled and floated away, somersaulting in the air as she left him to his own thoughts once more.

    A long breath escaped his lips, and he closed his eyes, blocking out the scene before them. If life is so wonderful, why is this world so full of life being destroyed?




    They descended from on high, like a group of angels returning to a god-forsaken earth.

    Finally, it was over.

    The world looked like it had been ravaged by war. The ground, once rich, loamy soil was now red with blood, covered by lifeless bodies and pieces of debris from trees, buildings, cars, everything and anything was scattered about. Some piles were indistinguishable, the difference between steel, nature and flesh impossible to make out. Small fires still burned in some places, carrying the strong stench of burnt flesh into the thick air in pillars of black smoke.

    The feelings of pain and defeat hung in the dead air, a ghastly stench that would overwhelm any mortal’s nostrils. Not to say the Legendaries were unaffected by what they saw: grief radiated off each one, the sadness gripping their hearts clear in each set of eyes that surveyed the scene of destruction. A world they themselves had shaped, now destroyed by its own creators.

    Ho-Oh’s sharp ruby eyes glanced over each Legendary present, boring into them intently and sending each a silent message. When they reached the lavender eyes of Mewtwo, holding them and locking them sternly, the clone couldn’t help but shudder. In the bird’s eyes he could see the pain he had endured from watching the Apocalypse, the intense sadness from seeing the death overwhelming the Legendary. But there was also the will to move on, to keep going, to begin anew. Ho-Oh was willing to lend them his strength, but they had to be willing to take it.

    Mewtwo nodded in silent acceptance. He was willing to help.

    With a satisfied gleam in his eye, Ho-Oh brought his long, elegant neck upwards, staring straight into the sky. Firm, resolute, and utterly dedicated. The mighty phoenix opened his golden beak wide, and from it released a long, mournful cry. The sound was pure and clear, echoing in the still air for a moment as if it was all that existed. A cry that could be heard all across the barren world.

    Once the sound began to die away, the world around them seemed to melt, everything on the ground turning into a grey, powdery substance that almost dissolved at the touch. Mewtwo blinked, and upon further inspection found it to be ash. The ashes of the dead world, now all that remained of it.

    The clone, however, still didn’t comprehend. The world, everything the Legendaries had been charged to protect, everything the humans had created, every part of it was gone. Now it was all just a barren wasteland, devoid of anything other than the residue of a cleansing fire. What was there to be done now? Leave the land to rot?

    “Et vetera, et nova. From the old comes the new.” Mewtwo snapped his head to see who had spoken, his eyes falling on a small green creature with a large, swept back head and short, stubby arms who floated in the air on blue pixie wings. Celebi’s deep-sunken sapphire eyes met with Mewtwo’s violet ones, and she gave him a small smile.

    “Rebuild,” she said in almost a whisper. The Time Travel Pokémon closed her eyes, and as the other Legendaries watched her intently, the tips of the two antennae on her head began to glow an electric blue. A great power was emanating off of her, one that each Legendary could feel: this was her greatest strength, drawn from the innermost part of her soul. There was a great rumbling underneath the ground, like a great beast stirring after a long slumber. The clouds in the sky shifted, first losing their red tinge, then dissolving and completely disappearing to reveal a perfectly clear azure blue sky, the sun lighting up the world for the first time in days, shining brighter than ever before.

    Her antennae stopped glowing, and Celebi opened her eyes, a peaceful, content look on her face. She looked calm, though slightly drained and somewhat unstable in the air, smiling slowly.

    Mewtwo looked around, unsure of what had just taken place. Did it even make a difference? The world would never be the same, and while he didn’t miss a world that had hated and shunned him, he still…missed it.

    “What is this all for?” Mewtwo asked aloud, a sudden anger in his voice. “Everything is gone! Nothing is left, save memories and ashes! There is no life left!” Didn’t they understand?! They had destroyed it, and they couldn’t bring it back! It was all for nothing! Even if the world had been evil, consumed by hatred and greed, it had still been full, and there had still been life in it!

    “From the old comes the new. All is not lost,” Ho-Oh announced, walking over to the clone, black talons digging into the ground and sending small puffs of ash into the air.

    “Look.” Ho-Oh spread a great, rainbow-colored wing, gesturing to Suicune. The beast of the Northern winds nodded to the phoenix in understanding, the huge crystal mounted atop her head shimmering in the light of the sun. She gave Mewtwo a gentle smile with her white muzzle, then with one blue-furred paw Suicune brushed away a layer of ash on the ground, revealing underneath a single bud with two tiny leaves barely poking out of the ground. As the ashes were brushed into the air, the young plant’s leaves unfurled, welcoming the sun and soaking in its rays for the first time.

    “The world shall be rebuilt, Mewtwo. It will not be the same, but it shall still be beautiful and unique. All will be well for everyone once again,” Ho-Oh explained gently, a small smile dancing on his lips. “And even you shall have a place among this new world.”

    Mewtwo’s eyes opened, and he saw the offer he was being made. To be accepted, not as a clone, not as a shadow, but to have a true place in the world and be accepted. That was, in a way, what he had always wanted, But did that mean he would lose his identity, and no longer be Mewtwo? Would he have to become something he wasn’t? Or did he still wish to be a mere copy?

    After a long moment of thought, Mewtwo finally spoke, closing his eyes and imagining what this new world would be.

    “Life…is wonderful. And now I can be a part of it; but as none but myself.” And he would be content.
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    Mew paused for a moment, then smiled, more to herself than to him. “Because life, no matter how small, no matter its importance, no matter its weight in the world, is still…wonderful.”
    Those words are similar to what Ambertwo said.

    “Look.” Ho-Oh spread a great, rainbow-colored wing, gesturing to Suicune. The beast of the Northern winds nodded to the phoenix in understanding, the huge crystal mounted atop her head shimmering in the light of the sun. She gave Mewtwo a gentle smile with her white muzzle, then with one blue-furred paw Suicune brushed away a layer of ash on the ground, revealing underneath a single bud with two tiny leaves barely poking out of the ground. As the ashes were brushed into the air, the young plant’s leaves unfurled, welcoming the sun and soaking in its rays for the first time.
    Suicune. Pretteh.

    You've excelled yourself this time, Psychic. This one was better than your last one-shot... which confused me a bit. And what makes it even better is that you've Suicune and Celebi, two of my favourite Johto Legendaries.

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    Anything that starts with an apocalyptic event makes me smile. At the same time, there was that sort of little glimmer at the end; a new world born in the wake of the other’s demise, a new and possibly better life for Mewtwo. Overall, there seemed to be this nice, potently bittersweet air about this piece, and I liked that.

    I also liked the way that some of the Legendaries were portrayed—especially Ho-oh, with that awesome, powerful voice he was described as having.

    Highlights:

    The sky was filled with crimson clouds, blocking out all the sun’s light and casting the world in shadow. Hellish fire rained from the sky, scorching everything in its path. The ground opened up and created gaping chasms, swallowing up anything nearby. Fierce gales swept even the heaviest objects off the ground, sending them crashing down miles away. Huge waves crashed on the shore, flooding areas miles around. Lightning flashed across the blood red sky, illuminating the scene below.
    Finally, it was over.

    The world looked like it had been ravaged by war. The ground, once rich, loamy soil was now red with blood, covered by lifeless bodies and pieces of debris from trees, buildings, cards, everything and anything was scattered about. Some piles were indistinguishable, the difference between steel, nature and flesh impossible to make out. Small fires still burned in some places, carrying the strong stench of burnt flesh into the thick air in pillars of black smoke.

    The feelings of pain and defeat hung in the dead air, a ghastly stench that would overwhelm any mortal’s nostrils. Not to say the Legendaries were unaffected by what they saw: grief radiated off each one, the sadness gripping their hearts clear in each set of eyes that surveyed the scene of destruction. A world they themselves had shaped, now destroyed by its own creators.
    “Et vetera, et nova. From the old comes the new.” Mewtwo snapped his head to see who had spoken, his eyes falling on a small green creature with a large, swept back head and short, stubby arms who floated in the air on blue pixie wings. Celebi’s deep-sunken sapphire eyes met with Mewtwo’s violet ones, and she gave him a small smile.

    “Rebuild.” She said in almost a whisper. The Time Travel Pokémon closed her eyes, and as the other Legendaries watched her intently, the tips of the two antennae on her head began to glow an electric blue. A great power was emanating off of her, one that each Legendary could feel: this was her greatest strength, drawn from the innermost part of her soul. There was a great rumbling underneath the ground, like a great beast stirring after a long slumber. The clouds in the sky shifted, first losing their red tinge, then dissolving and completely disappearing to reveal a perfectly clear azure blue sky, the sun lighting up the world for the first time in days, shining brighter than ever before.
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    Shoot! O_O I'm participating in the contest too starring the same character, but then again, you writing a Mewtwo story was quite expected. Anyway, to the review...

    *Nods*

    An interesting and the way the story was written was terrific. I think the flow from the destruction moment, to Mewtwo's puzzlement and dismay, to the recreation of the world (which I must point out that the way you described the powers of Celebi's and Suicune's were beautifully done), to how Mewtwo reacted upon being offered a chance to live as a legendary, was brilliant.

    At first, I was wondering why Ho-oh and the other legends decided to create the world in the first place and why they were destroying it. I was guessing that they were seeing the non-legends as children and such and they had to be punished for some reason. I like it when a story gets me thinking and reflecting and stuff.

    But, ah-ha! A spelling mistake!
    An small, cat-like creature sensed Mewtwo's thoughts
    It's supposed to be 'A'.

    Overall: You beat me. Nuff said. --;
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    Content-ness is good. =D

    That was brilliant, Psychic! =D You portrayed Mewtwo's emotion really well, I could really feel for him. A neat spin on the apocolypse, I especially loved the end.

    You are so going to kick all of our butts in the competiton. XD


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    Saphira:
    Those words are similar to what Ambertwo said.
    ...Er, that was kind of the point. o.O

    But anyways, thank you for the lovely review! ^^ And er, yes, confusion...


    Sike: X3 I've always dreamed of writing a story with an apocalypse of sorts. The destruction itself wasn't the fic's main focus, but I did like the way it turned out. But thank you, and yes, Ho-Oh = majesty, power, and I wanted to make that clear.


    Brian Powell: XD And here I was thinking people expected me to write about Regirock! *le shock* But yes, Mewtwo. *swoons over artwork friend recently made her LINK IS IN SIG*

    And thank you. I think it's only fair that Mewtwo gets a chance to be someone, especially after all he's been through.

    The Legendaries, in my opinion, created the world, however it was being taken over by evil, becoming corrupt. So the creators stepped in to "cleanse" the world and start it over from scratch. I mean, if you follow the Bible, God did it, except that in the case of my fic, there was no Noah's ark.

    Oh, and damn spelling mistakes. D: Thanks for pointing it out, and the for the wonderful review! *hugs*


    katiekitten: ^^; Why, thank you! yay positive feedback! *dances*



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    Since you are going to enter this in a contest i think that it's quite good you put in a lot of detail
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    Looking at this, I can see emotion is a very impressive skill of yours. Brilliant; ingenious; moving...

    This is a very interesting subject you've picked here. It was obvious from the start that Mewtwo would be one of the best characters to portray, and you did it spectacularly. I'd be surprised if you don't rule the competition.

    I liked the different phases Mewtwo passed through, reinforced by the legendaries; it showed some of the most complex feelings I've seen. The way he careened between confusion and shock, brooding silence to erupting anger, and finally settled to acceptance - it really made me feel for the clone.

    By the way, did anyone else spot the phoenix reference at the end? The way the earth burst into flame and faded into ash before springing forth from the ruins is very similar to the legend of the pheonix.

    And yet, despite all of that, I found... *le gasp* a TYPO!

    Doom was immanent.
    I believe you meant imminent.

    Well, good work and good luck in the competition! Not that you need it.

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    Hehe, I enjoyed this fic. Yeah, the end of the world fics are quite interesting! XD

    Like everyone else said, you put Mewtwo's emotions quite well. What I got out of this is he learns the lesson of not all humans are bad, that there is a second chance in life, and that life is wonderful no matter the situation (if I interpert this wrong, then sorry ^^;; ) I always love stories where the characters learn their lesson/lessons.

    And yeah, noticed a couple of mistaknes, but Brain Powell and Pyroken already mentions them.

    Well, good luck on the contest. Hope you will be place high in it! =D


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    This reminded me of a particular Bible story. The Powers-That-Be deciding that their creations need a wake-up call. And it is just good to start off a story with death and destruction. =)

    A few mistakes, grammar-wise and typos:

    “It must be done.” The Pokémon announced in a great, booming voice that echoed against the damp cave walls.
    “It must be done.” Ho-Oh repeated solemnly
    “You seem troubled, Mewtwo.” She said in his mind, the words ringing clear and pure as a crystal bell.
    “That is unlike you, Mewtwo.” She said gently.
    “Rebuild.”
    “From the old comes the new. All is not lost.” Ho-Oh announced
    All will be well for everyone once again.” Ho-Oh explained gently, a small smile dancing on his lips.
    I would think that all those full stops at the end of the dialogue (before the ending quotation marks) would be commas. It's those crazy dialogue tags again...


    covered by lifeless bodies and pieces of debris from trees, buildings, cards, everything and anything was scattered about.
    o.O I'm sure you mean cars. *imagines little 2 of Clubs scattered around everywhere*

    The might phoenix opened its golden beak wide,
    It should be mighty.

    Ho-Oh repeated solemnly, dipping his great head and allowing one, single tear to fall from its rube red eye.
    "Rube" = redneck. x3 Ruby is the color that you are looking for.

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    cjoey97: Yay, one of those reviews you can slap on to any fic and not know the difference!
    Heh, but thanks anyway.


    .:Pyroken Serafoculus:.: :O Good emotions?!? *does the drunkrabbitdance…for the first time in a while, surprisingly* That’s one of the things that make me so happy to hear! ;;

    ^^; Yeah, well, if I wasn’t so passionate about Mewtwo I doubt it would have been much more than “Mewtwo was sad because nobody liked him.”

    But you have a good eye! Yup, that was indeed a phoenix reference, one that played a pivotal role in the story, because like the phoenix, the new world will be born from the ashes of the old. *has no clue where she gets her ideas, but partly thanks Latin for that one*

    Anyway, thank you for the wonderful review!


    Bay: Thanks a ton for the great review. And because I had originally written a lot of this at 2:00 in the morning, it consequently had a LOT of ideas and themes, those being among them. We always learn from what’s around us, and every experience teaches us new things, and I think that this fact is especially important in Mewtwo’s life, because he has to be willing to learn and grow, especially since he is really the youngest Legendary and he also came into the world with a clouded view of it.


    Hanako Tabris: YES, death and destruction! *first time writing any kind of violence*

    Hanako, I want you to know that you make me feel stupid. XD I can’t believe I missed that many mistakes! Thank you for pointing them out! *has no idea if she’s allowed to edit mistakes or not, but does so anyway*
    Also, I get really confused about putting full stops versus commas during dialogue, but when in doubt, it just put a period. Either way, thanks for finding all those errors! ^^;



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    Oooh where to start. I'm so rusty on giving like... real reviews.

    Excellent idea. Not really sure where this takes place but I can see that it really didn't matter what canon it was in. Though guessing it was anime.

    Or your own. Doesn't matter.

    Thought it was funny when you called Ho-oh's smile was on lips... birdy with lips. :P

    Anyway, lets see if I can find some descriptions I really liked....

    Creatures of every shape and size were running about in panic, trying desperately to escape the natural disasters that took the lives of hundreds every second. The panic was like a disease, spreading like wildfire, affecting humans and Pokémon alike causing them to scream out in desperation, running as if blind, trampling one another in a mad dash to find nonexistent safety. The flames falling from the heavens ignited whatever they touched, consuming plants, buildings, even living creatures, causing them to burn to the ground. An unnatural fear gripped the heart of every living creature, clouding their minds with single one thought: run. Friends had become enemies, blocking all possible escapes, and in their fear some even rung the necks of others. It was mad, and the world no longer made any sense.
    PANIC! FEAR! D: aaahh... yeah I liked it. Hinting at the betrayal friends and allies do to each other when they are panicking. how a mob with fear can not think only act on pure instinct to survive. Just was cool and burny and... o.O I want marshmallows.

    “You seem troubled, Mewtwo.” She said in his mind, the words ringing clear and pure as a crystal bell
    I really don't know what a crystal bell sounds like... but it must sound just like how I picture Mew's voice. Pure and love.

    With a satisfied gleam in his eye, Ho-Oh brought his long, elegant neck upwards, staring straight into the sky. Firm, resolute, and utterly dedicated. The mighty phoenix opened his golden beak wide, and from it released a long, mournful cry. The sound was pure and clear, echoing in the still air for a moment as if it was all that existed. A cry that could be heard all across the barren world.
    Something about Phoenix's that are just neat. The ability to rebirth from ash. Thats why Ho-oh is such a cool pokemon and usually very underestimated. I'm use to seeing it displayed as a cocky know it all who is supreme but this one...

    While being a leader he is also understanding of the others. His word isn't supreme but works for the good of the others as well as the rest of the world. It was just nice to see it differently for once.

    Btw your are so better then me at describing the legenderies.

    Mewtwo’s eyes opened, and he saw the offer he was being made. To be accepted, not as a clone, not as a shadow, but to have a true place in the world and be accepted. That was, in a way, what he had always wanted, But did that mean he would lose his identity, and no longer be Mewtwo? Would he have to become something he wasn’t? Or did he still wish to be a mere copy?
    Nice reflection. Just... nice.


    Mmm your descriptions has really improved since that other story, uuh... crap forgot the name of it. But yours flows a lot more then it use too, you were always good but sometimes it felt like you were so good that it was almost robotic... but this... no it flowed just right for me. Not to much and not to little.

    I must steal your grammar... hahaha *steal*
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    It was in December of 2011 that she found out she had cancer.
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    A connection I made eight years ago on this forum passed away, alone, unloved by most, her own father probably didn't care.
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    And now, the trinity is finally complete. *mystic stance*

    XD

    Ok, to the oneshot. I really enjoyed the theme of the apocalypse and the legendaries looking down upon it. Mewtwo's confusion about whether or not he felt regret and pity was also very nice.

    Quote love!

    “You seem troubled, Mewtwo.” She said in his mind, the words ringing clear and pure as a crystal bell.
    Nice usage of descriptive language there.

    “It must be done.” Ho-Oh repeated solemnly, dipping his great head and allowing one, single tear to fall from his ruby red eye. The last tear he would shed, with it letting go of his love and attachment for the world.
    Again, another very moving, pretty sentence.

    They descended from on high, like a group of angels returning to a god-forsaken earth.
    The imagery there was very nice; I could imagine the legendaries floating down to earth quite well.

    All in all, a good, solid one shot. I don't think it's yoru best one, but it's still a fine example of your writing prowess. ^__^

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    And with the last two posts, a review triangle is complete. Yay for Mewtwo One-Shots!


    Myuu: The time period really doesn’t matter much, but you’ll notice Mewtwo mentioning, not by name, those who created and used him as well as the few humans who were ‘good,’ aka Rocket and Ash and co. respectively. But they’re all “long gone” meaning they’re dead, so this is after the Animé.

    Ah yes, mob panic. *hands you a marshmallow* Fear does scary things to a person. It can take over your mind and cloud your vision, like a less evil version of anger. Good observation.

    Making Ho-Oh wise and caring was a definite must do for me. I hate how everyone seems to think he’s arrogant and all, because…it’s Ho-Oh, guardian of life, and he never seemed bad to me. And yes, phoenixes have awesome powers that really worked for this fic. =)

    I believe you were thinking of The Mutations. Heh, I think I’ve gotten better since then, and your kind words make me even more sure. All great things to hear- I thank thee, and in return, I shall allow thee to steal mine grammar. X3


    Typhlo: Zomg, flashbak, it’s like I’m one of the three witches again from Macbeth!

    Fair is foul and foul is fair,
    Hover through the fog and filthy air!


    Ah, good times, good times. Say if like, the forum ever does Macbweth, we three should be the wtiches. Yeah. X3

    Heh, but seriously, I’m glad you liked it. Thanks for all the loverly comments- makes me sure that I’m doing this properly.

    Anyhow, thanks for the neat review!


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    O_O..................... O_O WOW, now that's just wow.

    Anyway, I *cough*forcibly*cough* read your story, and I must say awesome job! I love how you did the end of the world thing, it REALLY draws in readers. Great for people with short attention spans, LIKE ME XD

    Anyway, I love how you described Ho-Oh, then again, all the descriptions were great.

    No Lugia! Aaaaaaaaaw...

    *skims through reviews* first off, LOL, you got Hanako'd. Also, Typhlogirl!? O_o... I like typhlosions ...

    Anyway, great job with this and um... keep up the good work? XD

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    Pwnanator: XD Oh please, you make it sound like you suffered the whole time you read it- surely it wasn't that bad! I assume not, seeing as you seemed to have liked it, which I'm glad you did.

    Glad you like the description, but Lugia was there- he just wasn't mentioned because I didn't want to go over every single Legendary. @.@

    And YES, short attention spans! That's me, and you too, eh?! *hi-fives* Short and sweet, that's the way to go!


    Oh, and I'm getting to reviewing your fic. I'm just a bit slow, though I want you to know in advance that it's better already, and I only read the first few paragraphs! ^^



    On another note...
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    FWEEEEEEEEEE! *does the drunkrabbitdance and hands out celebratory muffins*

    I am, to say the least, EXTREMELY excited with this result, and I would like to thank all of you for having read and reviewed my story.

    Sandra, I eagerly await your review.


    ...Will I get in trouble if I break out the champagne?

    ~Psychic

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