Sorry, I've been kinda busy, finals. The chapters have been excellent! Very descriptive, and though I didn't comment, I've been awaiting the next chapter to come. I don't know, but you have this way with writing that makes it all almost seem real. I can almost see what you write, and actually seeing it would be the only way to make this story better. You've done a good job with introducing each new character, and even better at evolving them. Kim is very interesting, probably my favorite. All the characters are very original, it's interesting how they each evolve and react to each other. I think the only problem would be length, for me, it's too short. But, I read fast, so that might explain it. Other than that, I saw no real problems. But, like I said, reading fast kinda makes mistakes hard to see. Hehe, well, I've said my part. Congrats, good job, can't wait for more! Good luck with the next chapter, I can't wait to see how each character evolves even more in the next chapter!