This fic is currently in script format, the earliest stage in order to help me visualize the story and correct any problems with the dialogue. Chapter 1 is a full chapter but I am probably going to include another scene at the end, one that'll create some sort of plot (the first two chapters is introducing the characters). Chapter 2 is just a collection of unfinished scenes. Maybe I’ll just combine both chapters since it may help the story flow better. I'll finish up chapter 2 then revise it and fit in body language and actions to help bring them to life. Right now, Elyse is so damn static and completely lacking personality. Same can be said with a few other characters right now…
This will be turned into a manga only if the fic is well received. However, I might just skip to the comic. Right now, after the first scene, is just a collection of scenes. I’m trying to find the right balance of exposition and scenes and how to meld these scenes together while keeping a steady pace. I guess you can say I’m a bit of a perfectionist.
WARNING! It's still incomplete and there's a lot of rough edges to buff out.
Any comments, constructive criticism, and suggestions are welcome. Don't hold back.