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    Quote Originally Posted by Lolitar View Post
    Hay! I love your stories! Put me on the pm list for when a new chapter is out if you have one... BUT I LOVE THIS. And, ps, just wondering, is Pyra Torren a digimon story? If it is, TELL ME! and link me to it. P.S. I can imagine what some other people would say if they saw daggerback again... 'WHAT THE F-* BOOOOOM*" lol. Also, does Jeff have corphish and treecko with him? Because if he does, where about to have some serious daggerback *** woopin. >
    Yeah, sure thing! Thanks. Consider yourself added.

    Nah, Pyra Torren is a character from a Digimon RPG that I'm in. All the other people in the RPG have one of their characters in their signature too.

    The pokemon Jeff has with him are Corphish, Daedalus and Drezdk. Treecko is back with the others and Atlas is with Prometheus. Heh, Daggerback might be more of a threat than you think, even if he is part ground-type. =P

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    Wow thanks! And uh.. is it a game? Could you provide me the link? *im in america.* just in case that matters.. and a certain guy with a very angry avatar seems to hate english differences. :/ lol.
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    Wait, didn't i reply to this already? No? Shoot!

    Sorry, man, i really thought i had done this already! Let's-a-go!

    After bobandbill's extensive grammar check, there was only one area left to correct:

    “<Hungry?>” Piplus asked, watching the Corphish with amusement.
    That's Piplup to you, buddy. :P

    NOw for the top three moments of the chapter (imo)

    Kevin eyed the backpack hanging from Jeff’s shoulders and a victorious smirk creeped onto his face. “Hey, Jeff? How did I hide the bags when that cop showed up outside of Mauville

    Jeff gave him a confused look, but responded, “You threw the bags into Prometheus’ mouth to hide them…” He glanced at Kevin as the blonde-haired teen’s smile grew exponentially. Jeff’s eyes widened with realization. “No… No no. No way! That’s not gonna happen! Not in your life!”

    “Uhh… Am I missing something?” Blane asked.

    "Well, Blane," Kevin began, "I figured out that a way for both Prometheus and Jeff to go- Prometheus to find Atlas and Jeff to give him the medicine- without Jeff having to worry about being torn up by the sandstorm, is for Jeff to be transported in Pro’s mouth.”

    Prometheus sneered. “<It’s ’Prometheu-’…>” He cut himself off as he backtracked to what Kevin had said. Like Jeff, his eyes also widened.

    “I don’t want to be in an Onix’s mouth!”

    “<I don’t want a human in my mouth!>”

    Their chorus fell on deaf ears. Kevin, Blane, and his Piplup all seemed to be stifling laughter. “You want to get Atlas back, don’t you?” Kevin asked between laughs.

    They both nodded and looked at one another tentatively. Prometheus sighed. “<Let’s get this over with…>”

    Jeff conceded as well and reluctantly approached Prometheus’ mouth. He cast a furious glare to Kevin. “You’re loving this, aren’t you?”

    Kevin’s chuckle was a full on guffaw by now. “You have no idea! …Quick! Toss me Corphish’s pokeball! He has to see this!”

    The dark haired teen ignored him and looked at Prometheus. The Onix slowly opened his mouth, with some embarrassment at the situation obvious on his face. Jeff meant to step forwards, but his limbs seemed to refuse. He stared with trepidation at the large serpent’s open maw. “<Get on with it, then. My mouth is starting to dry out.>”

    “That’s supposed to make me go faster?”
    Best non-Corphish part of the chapter! Well, almost...

    “Oh, stop whining, Jeff, or else I’ll make Ace soak you again,” Kevin good-heartedly threatened.

    “Do that and I’ll get Atlas to give you an Onix-sized hug,” Jeff retorted.

    “Do that and I’ll get Blitz to practice his sword-dance right beside you,” Kevin countered.

    Jeff swallowed. “…You win.”

    “Was there ever any doubt?” Kevin said with a grin.

    “Oh, brother,” said Rachel, sighing.

    He sneered at Kevin, not giving up yet. “Well maybe I’ll give Corphish a gun. You know how much he likes the Die Hard movies.”

    The blonde haired boy froze with fear. “N-Not cool…”
    Getting warmer...

    Kevin ignored him and looked to Jeff and Blane. “You two go on Atlas.” Jeff was about to protest, but Kevin cut him off when he turned his attention to Rachel. “And, Rache? You get to ride my Onix,” he said with a wide grin.

    Rachel blinked. “…What?”

    “I said you get to come with me on Prometheus’ back.” His smirk grew even wider.

    She blinked again. “…Excuse me?”

    “Are you blonde? I just want to know if you want to get on with me on my rock snake!”

    Corphish was laughing uncontrollably on the ground, tears forming in his eyes as he struggled to breathe.

    Rachel blushed. “I swear, Togepis are more mature than you! And you’re the one who has blonde hair!” she huffily said, pushing by Kevin, who was grinning feverishly.

    “I just don’t understand what was so confusing about what I said!” he remarked, casting a wink to Corphish, who was still doubled over in laughter.
    Gentlemen, we have a winner... XD

    I agree with bobandbill (can i call ya bnb? only it's kinda long to type in my sleep-deprived state ), Jeff is trning into some sort of Tristan. Sorrow and suck follow him around like the plague. Dae's indifferent, Treecko's stubborn as hell, Atlas was using him... are Corphish and Drezdk the onle ones on his team who like him?

    And running into Daggerback on top of everything. Waaaay, not cool. Well, Jeff had this one coming, He was told to not go wandering.

    Prometheus reminded me a bit of Team Rocket's Butch from the anime. Proud and proper that Onix is indeed...

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    Hey Griff, sorry for the late review but I, like you, have been caught up in school and other things. I'm really into this story now, though. It's reached that point where the emotional backstory and catalog of events is so rich and you're taking full advantage of that in the surprises, plot points, and even the dialog of these new chapters. It's really cool. Keep up the good work.
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    (Sorry it took so long. Had exams and stuff. Also, I'm sure Daggerback is happy that he won Best Non-Human Villain... even though the only person he was competing against was himself. So, good job beating, uhh, yourself, Daggerback.)

    Fossil Fuels

    The waves crashed down on the wet beach sand, staining it brown and uplifting rocks, shells, seaweed, and the occasional Krabby before dragging them back towards the bright blue sea. Then the next wave would come and hammer the beach wash-ups against the sand again.

    He could watch the light aqua waves all day and for all intents and purposes, he intended to.

    A man in his early forties, wearing only a dark blue bathing suit and sunglasses, lay in a beach chair, which sat about a dozen meters from the crashing surf. From the low-standing table left of his chair, he picked up a blue cocktail that donned a lime wedge on the rim and took a sip from it. A warm ocean breeze flowed through his short, dark brown hair and around his recently clean-shaven, business-appropriate face. The bright sun shone down on his relaxed, muscular body.

    The man looked from his martini glass over to a Swampert that lay in the sand next to his chair with his large hands behind his head. “I could get used to all of these business trips, couldn’t you?” he asked in a slightly grizzled voice.

    The Swampert grinned and responded with a nod. They continued sitting in silence, listening to the waves until footsteps could be heard in the sand behind them. A skinny man in a tuxedo walked over and stood beside the man, extending his arm and handing him a folded piece of paper.

    “Excuse me, sir. This came for you. It seems there was a development,” he said.

    The man’s blue eyes, hidden behind the shades, scanned the paper and the corners of his mouth formed a grin. “Heh… He got it.”

    “Mm, quite,” the tuxedoed man answered. “Oh yes, you have a meeting with the network distributor at seven thirty tonight and one via conference video call with your administrators an hour later. Is that alright, Mister K-”

    “Please, pal,” the man interrupted, looking up from his drink and giving an affirmative thumbs up with an accompanying smirk. “None of that formal crap while I’m supposed to be on vacation. Just call me Archie…”

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    Kevin lay back in the sandy grass with his hands behind his head, relaxing as if he didn’t have a care in the world. Since he wasn’t all that worried about Jeff, that may well have been true. Rachel sat nearby, with some worry on her face, however she was much more calm than Blane. The dark haired teen paced back and forth with his Piplup in his arms. He barely took his eyes off of the pass. Treecko merely sat in the grass nonchalantly and looked up at the sky.

    “Do you think the storm will ease up enough for us to follow them soon?” Blane asked while looking beyond the pass into the stormy desert.

    “Nah,” said Kevin with a shrug. A sly grin formed on his face. “And as awesome as I am, even I can’t control the weather, so take a load off and stop trying to be so proactive.”

    Blane grumbled and reluctantly sat down beside his Piplup. “I hate sitting around.”

    “Really? I never would’ve guessed,” Kevin scoffed. “If you’re really that hung up about it, you can look for a Skitty stuck up a tree.”

    “I wonder how they’re doing right now? They’ve been gone awhile,” mused Rachel.

    Kevin laughed and shrugged. “I bet Jeff probably did something idiotic and got himself in trouble.”

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    Jeff let out a sharp gasp as a purple fist that held him by the collar of his shirt slammed him into the dusty stone wall, pinning him there with a muscular forearm. Daggerback glared, well, daggers into the human’s grimacing eyes. To Jeff’s left was a hole in the interior wall that Daggerback had previously bashed through to cut him off from reaching the stairs from which he came. It wasn’t as if he had anywhere to run to, though, with the sandstorm still outside.

    “<Where is it?!> Daggerback demanded, pressing Jeff further against the shadow-laden wall.

    “Where’s what?!” Jeff shot back in a desperate tone.

    “<Don’t play dumb with me!>” the Nidoking roared, glaring straight into Jeff’s eyes.

    “I’ll stop playing dumb when you stop acting like I know what you’re talking about!” he countered, keeping one hand on Daggerback’s in an attempt to get free from his hold, and using the other to stealthily reach towards his backpack’s side pocket while Daggerback was looking into his eyes.

    “<The fossil! I know you have it!>”

    “Well, maybe you misplaced it- Go!” Jeff suddenly shouted, ripping Treecko’s pokeball from the pocket and throwing it at Daggerback’s face. The ball hit the poison pokemon in the cheek before bouncing off, ricocheting to the ground, and opening.

    As Daggerback glanced down at it, Jeff closed his eyes to brace himself for the bright light that always came with the opening of a pokeball. He gave it a few moments before opening his eyes and looking around triumphantly at the spot where he threw it.

    ...The pokeball was found to be completely empty. Jeff then looked to Daggerback, who stood beside it while still pinning Jeff to the wall, tapping his food impatiently and donning a level, not amused stare. Jeff chuckled sheepishly upon realizing that Treecko was back with the others.

    “I-I thought... Heh heh... Ugh...” He shrunk back towards the wall, pressing against his backpack. Jeff could feel the remaining pokeballs shift in the pocket so they pressed against his elbow. He knew that the only way he could get out of this was with help from his pokemon, but after his last failed attempt his time was running out.

    Daggerback rolled his eyes before literally ripping the bag from his back. Jeff started and frantically grabbed for his backpack, managing to momentarily grab the side pocket. During the key two seconds that he was able to keep hold of the bag before Daggerback’s strength won out, he was able to feel out a familiar, round item in the pocket. The Nidoking yanked the backpack and Jeff quickly pulled back his hand and tried to indiscriminately place the item in his back pocket while Daggerback was busy with the bag.

    “<So, the fossil...>” Daggerback begun, while holding the bag up in the air away from Jeff’s reach and shaking it in a taunting manner.

    “...I don’t know anything about a fossil,” Jeff responded, shifting uncomfortably as he continued to be propped up against the wall by Daggerback.

    “<Oh yeah? Then what did you put behind your back?>” the Nidoking questioned, raising an eyebrow.

    Jeff’s stomach clenched upon realizing that the purple pokemon had noticed his clumsy, last-ditch effort to help himself. “Err... Nothing.”

    “<You wouldn’t be lying to me, would ya?>” Daggerback asked in a sly tone, tilting his head downwards so that his horn neared Jeff’s face.

    The teen’s eyes widened. “...Maybe something...”

    “<Drop it in front of you. Now,>” he ordered.

    “You... GOT IT!” Jeff shouted, swinging around his arm and throwing a pokeball at Daggerback once more. However, this time Daggerback expected it and he swatted the object downwards so that it hit the stone floor between Jeff and himself. This time, a bright light erupted from the sphere and a familiar Corphish emerged. The water pokemon noticed Jeff and immediately after noticed a large violet figure opposite the human. His gaze slowly shifted to the massive pokemon and eventually turned upwards to lock eyes with Daggerback.

    Before he could even open his mouth, Daggerback grabbed Corphish by the neck with his other hand and shoved him against the wall beside his trainer. The orange shellfish winced and glanced over to Jeff beside him. “<Don’t worry, Jeff; I’m here to save you...>” he said sheepishly.

    Jeff groaned while Daggerback glared at the two of them. “<Nice to see you again, little Corphish,>” the Nidoking said with a sneer.

    “<Actually, you can call me ‘Lord Protector Corphish’. Even ‘Sir Corphish’ will do... but yeah, long time no see, Daggerbutt the Aggressor!>”

    “<That’s ‘Daggerback the Oppressor’!>” he growled, pushing Corphish against the wall with increased force.

    “<Heh, that’s what I meant!>”

    “<Anyways, the fossil... It went missing after he and that Treecko escaped from me and gave me this!>” Daggerback said while turning his head to show more clearly the eye patch on his face.

    “<It really brings out your... eye! You’ve got the whole ‘bad boy’ look down; a lot of girls really dig that. Did anyone tell you that you’d look good in pink?>” Corphish rambled.

    Daggerback sneered and slammed his tail onto the floor with a crash. “<Stop stalling!>”

    “<Gee, you think yelling at us will make us open up to you?>”

    Jeff gave Daggerback a level stare. “Won’t you just kill us once we tell you?”

    The Nidoking raised an eyebrow. “<Just because I’m not the nicest guy around doesn’t mean I’m going to kill you. Sure, I’m not above beating you guys to pulps, but I’m not a monster.>”

    “<I feel so much better now...>” Corphish murmured with an accompanying roll of his eyes. “<Hey, Needlenose, why do you want a fossil so bad anyways? Are you a big dinosaur enthusiast or something?>”

    Daggerback chuckled and allowed the two to drop to the ground. He walked over to the large hole in the wall that he created and moved a large slab of stone over it to cover it up. He then walked over to the doorway and sat down beside it, leaning back against the wall. The poison pokemon grinned and looked over, through the darkness, at his two captives, who were catching their breath.

    “<No, shellfish... It just so happens that I’m a mercenary.>”

    “A mercenary?” Jeff asked in shock. “A pokemon mercenary?”

    “<What? You’re not the only human that can communicate with pokemon, ya know. And as ya know, pokemon can often do things that humans can’t. Some people take advantage of that fact, ‘cept I take advantage of them by making a living offa it.>”

    “Aren’t some people put off by you coming into their store and buying stuff?”

    Daggerback scoffed and placed his hands behind his head in a relaxed fashion. “<I don’t get money. They give me whatever tools and equipment I need in order to secure my territory and get my jobs done quickly. It’s a pretty good deal, actually.>”

    “<So that’s how he had all those traps and stuff,>” Corphish mused.

    “That means somebody wants those fossils? That’s why you’re after us?” Jeff asked.

    “<That, and I’ve got a bone to pick with that damn Treecko.>”

    “Hey, you were the guy who attacked him first!” Jeff countered.

    “<And me,>” added Corphish, raising his claw.

    “And Corphish!”

    “<Thanks, Jeff.>”

    Daggerback let out a dismissive grunt. “<They were the ones who trespassed on my land when there were clearly signs around the whole perimeter.>”

    “<You mean the ones with the stick figures? I thought a child drew that! Gee, for someone who’s dexterous enough to tie knots like you can with those funny claws of yours, you sure don’t draw very well...>” Corphish remarked.

    “<It was just a red ‘X’...>” Daggerback said in a scathing voice.

    “<Really? Because it looked like->”

    Before Corphish could make him any angrier, Jeff quickly stood up and interrupted. “So who hired you?”

    Daggerback grinned and waggled one of his claws. “<I can’t give out that sort of information, but the offer’s definitely worth what it’s taking to finally catch you guys. Besides, I’m the one who asks the questions around here,>” he barked, getting to his feet. “<So tell me, where’s the fossil?>”

    Jeff and Corphish exchanged glances. “We don’t have it...”

    They soon found several long, sharp purple pins enter the ground just in front of their feet, causing them both to jump back against the wall. Daggerback continued to smirk as he stared at them. An uneasy Jeff and Corphish exchanged nervous glances as they tried to regain their composure. “<Still don’t have it?>”

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    Prometheus trudged through the dark desert slowly. This was because Atlas was slumped over his back, gripping slightly so that he wouldn’t fall off. The able Onix followed the cliff face in the general direction that he came, since the cliff inevitably led back to the pass from which he entered. The sun was close to meeting the horizon in the west, causing the cliff to cast a shadow that darkened the desert more than the sandstorm already had.

    “<How are you holding up, mate?>” Prometheus asked his friend.

    “<Physically, I can move on my own,>” Atlas answered.

    “<Physically, you’re barely able to stand up,>” Prometheus countered. “<Well, that’s physically, what about otherwise?>”

    Atlas’ grey eyes gazed at the ground, watching the shifting sands on the darkened ground blow with the storm. “<I don’t think Jeff will forgive me...>”

    “<Err... I see,>” Prometheus replied awkwardly. The Onix was never that good in situations like this. “<Well... if he’s really your friend, he’ll forgive you. You... err... forgave me, after all... and such.>”

    A faint grin appeared on Atlas’ face. “<Thank you.>”

    “<Don’t mention it... seriously.>”

    Atlas let out a light chuckle, which prompted a small grin on Prometheus’ face. “<How far do you suppose is left?>” Atlas asked him.

    “<I should say about one hundred runs are left. That’s just a guess though,>” Prometheus answered. “<That scar... That’s from Kronos, right?>”

    The weakened Onix nodded. “<Yes... My quote unquote ‘mark of shame’...>”

    “<Right... About that...>” Prometheus begun with some insecurity in his voice.

    “<It’s okay, Prometheus. I understand you were scared,>” Atlas reassured him. Prometheus opened his mouth to object to the claim, but Atlas cut him off. “<Though I know you won’t admit it.>”

    Atlas’ friend rolled his eyes and continued onward along the base of the cliff. “<...From now on, I’ll support you no matter what, okay? ...That is, unless you do something idiotic without thinking it through, then I’ll be forced to stop you,>” Prometheus said, grinning.

    It was then when they felt the direction of the wind changing. The sand no longer pelted their backs, it hit the side of their bodies that was closest to the cliff on their right. The two Onix also noticed that, through the sand ahead of them, they could see light. Prometheus beamed victoriously. “<You know what this means? We made it!>”

    Prometheus burst through the cloud of sand and found both he and his friend in the sandy but gentle pass that met with the grass. Blane bolted upwards upon seeing them. “They’re back!” he yelled.

    Kevin and Rachel turned to see them coming slowly towards them. Prometheus lay down on the ground and allowed Atlas to crawl off and rest on the ground. Kevin ran forwards. “Yo, where’s Jeff?” he asked, looking around eagerly. “...Did you eat him?”

    Prometheus straightened up and turned back towards the desert. “<No. I’m going back for him while Atlas keeps a constant rhythm by pounding his tail on the ground so that I can get my bearings.>”

    Kevin’s eyes widened. “You left him in the middle of that?! He’ll be torn apart!”

    “<I’m not an idiot, idiot!>” Prometheus snapped. “<I left him in some giant, hollow stone thing. A building, I think it’s called.>”

    “He must be in Mirage Tower,” Rachel deduced.

    “Yeah, I knew that,” Kevin said dismissively. “Well, what are you waiting for, Pro? The sooner we get Jeff, the sooner we can leave.”

    Prometheus gave a deep snarl before turning and slithering quickly into the desert.

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    Daggerback dug through Jeff’s bag while they stood on and watched helplessly. Corphish was well aware that, even with him being a water-type and Daggerback being a ground-type, he was no match for him. Corphish noticed the Nidoking had a bag of his own resting on the other side of the room.

    “<Let’s see here...>” Daggerback said as he began throwing the items he found to the ground. “<Soaps, shampoos, a toothbrush, conditioners, hair mousse... bath salts? ...What are you doing? Travelling? Or starting a spa?>” he asked with a raised eyebrow.

    Jeff grimaced and blushed slightly. “Damn it, Kevin... That’s the last time I ever take you to a hotel.

    “<A clock radio, brochures, a telephone, various wires...>” Daggerback continued.

    Corphish looked at Jeff and whispered. “<I’m just a simple pokemon... So do you happen to have any plans to get outta here up in your ol’ bread basket?>”

    “I’m working on it...” Jeff murmured.

    “<I don’t want to seem pushy, but pretty soon he’s gonna find that fossil and when he does, I’m worried what he’ll do to us. I don’t exactly want to be tied down and eaten by a horde of angry Sandslash!>”

    “...I think your imagination is getting away from you, Corp,” Jeff said, giving him a level stare.

    “<Would you really put it past Daggerbutt?>” Corphish asked.

    Jeff was about to reply, but he was distracted when the Nidoking in question took something out of the teen’s bag. In Daggerback’s purple hand was a balled-up shower curtain. Jeff froze. He remembered that it was the shower curtain he used to put the fossil in to protect it.

    “<Maybe it’s wrapped up in this,>” Daggerback mused and began to unwrap it. “<Then I’ll have all seven.>”

    He looked desperately to Corphish, who returned a worried look. Jeff suddenly closed his eyes and balled up his fists. “Corphish! Bubblebeam! Go to his right!” he shouted.

    “<You got it!>” the water pokemon yelled, unleashing a rapid volley of exploding bubbles while moving as quickly as he could to the left, opposite to the doorway out. The watery orbs burst on impact with Daggerback, eliciting growls of frustration as he dropped the bag and the shower curtain in shock. The Nidoking walked forward and opened up his maw from which he released a shower of poison pins. Corphish increased his pace, causing the pins to explode behind him. He continued running and firing bubbles out of his right claw as the needles shattered in his wake.

    As this happened, Jeff ran towards the rear of Daggerback, where his bag and items were. He hastily grabbed his bag and the shower curtain, which he quickly shoved into the backpack. Unbeknownst to Daggerback, Jeff threw the bag through the doorway and into the hallway where the stairs were. The teen picked up a rock and ran over to the left, where he and Corphish had been pinned to the wall, just as the Nidoking turned his head to follow the water pokemon. Jeff picked up Corphish’s pokeball so that he would be able to use it to recall Corphish, if it came to that.

    He saw Corphish beginning to run along the wall opposite to him, which brought him closer to Daggerback; he had fallen into Daggerback's plan and had no choice or else he’d be hit by the poison pins that followed him. Jeff clutched the rock in his hand and hurled it at the back of Daggerback’s head. The Nidoking let out a snarl. The rock didn’t really hurt him, but it got his attention. Daggerback spun around to face Jeff.

    At the same time, Corphish approached the door and gave Jeff a nod. The poison pokemon began to charge Jeff, hoping to use the human as a means to get the shellfish pokemon to behave. Jeff recoiled in response to the charging Nidoking. Corphish knew he had to act quickly. He levelled his pincers with Daggerbacks legs and let loose a tremendous volley of bubbles.

    The translucent orbs burst on contact with Daggerback’s legs, who let out a surprised yelp as his legs buckled and he fell, unbraced, onto the floor. Jeff took this opportunity to sprint for the door which Corphish was already at. Daggerback angrily swung his tail around, which managed to catch Jeff’s leg and send him careening to the ground as well. The teen winced and attempted to crawl forward, but he found that he couldn’t go any further.

    Jeff tugged at his leg but it wouldn’t budge. He looked down frantically and saw that Daggerback’s tail was coiled around his ankle. “<Where... do you think you’re going?>” the Nidoking snarled.

    “Corphish!” Jeff cried out.

    “<Crap!>” Corphish sputtered, running to aid his friend. The water pokemon clamped his right pincer down on Daggerback’s tail and squeezed, but the Nidoking’s hold continued.

    “Try Crabhammer!” advised Jeff in a panic.

    Corphish complied and began pounding his water-soaked claw down on Daggerback’s tail. The behemoth of a pokemon grimaced with pain, but tried to remain holding onto Jeff as he got to his feet. “<Why can’t I be a Machoke of a Corphish?>” Corphish muttered.

    “Give it all you’ve got in one blow, Corp!”

    Corphish nodded, raised his claw over his head and jumped to the best of his ability into the air. He brought down his pincers onto Daggerback’s tail in a powerful strike. The Nidoking growled in pain and his tail tensed up upon being struck before slackening and allowing Jeff to remove his foot.

    “Let’s go!” Jeff shouted, picking up Corphish and scrambling to his feet. He bolted towards the door. Upon getting through the stone doorway, he bent down to pick up his bag where Corphish grabbed one of the straps. The duo then heard pounding footsteps reach the door behind them. Jeff turned and saw Daggerback at the doorway. The Nidoking let out a savage roar the struck fear into both of their hearts.

    “<Time to leave, Jeff!>” Corphish shouted.

    Jeff agreed instantaneously. He sprinted at full speed down the end of the hall towards the parallel eroded stairway that he came up. The teen grimaced as he heard Daggerback’s thunderous stampede quickly gaining on them. Jeff dug deep and increased his speed, nearing the end of the hallway. He was forced to slow down near the end and he shot to the side and turned to pedal down the rocky stairs.

    Daggerback growled from behind them and attempted to swipe at them, but missed. He too rounded the corner and began chasing them down the stairs, causing the weak rocks the staircase was made of to chip off under his feet. Jeff’s face lit up upon seeing the light of the outside pouring in from the front door.

    “<Almost there!>” Corphish shouted.

    Jeff bolted for the doorway... but stopped when a blast of sand pushed him and Corphish back inside. They winced and staggered back. Jeff looked outside to see that the sandstorm was still raging outside. A deep, victorious chuckle sounded out from behind them.

    “<Heh heh heh... Forgot about the storm, did we?>” asked Daggerback, coming to a smug walk towards them and folding his arms.

    Jeff spun around and Corphish leapt out of his arms and readied himself for a fight.

    Daggerback smirked. “<Don’t bother fighting back. You don’t have anywhere to run and you both know I’m stronger than you. Don’t worry; I’ll make sure you two won’t->”

    The Nidoking’s voice cut out and his eyes widened upon seeing something behind the trapped two. The massive head of an Onix burst through the swirling wall of sand, past the doorway and into the tower. Without so much as a word, it scooped Jeff and Corphish into its mouth and disappeared just as quickly back into the sandstorm.

    Daggerback stood there in pure and utter shock as he watched his two prisoners seemingly get eaten by an Onix completely out of the blue. His eye twitched and his extended, pointing arm trembled slightly.

    “<That... was... unexpected...>” he managed through his shock.

    Of course, it wasn’t long until he remembered that Jeff had an Onix, to which a mighty roar of frustration followed...

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    Atlas lay down on the grass, continuing to pound his tail slowly on the ground. Kevin put his headphones on and began listening to his CD player in an attempt to drown out the repetitive thumping. Blane was as restless as ever so he attempted to distract himself by chatting with Rachel about her pokemon.

    “This pounding is giving me a headache!” Kevin growled, ripping off his headphones as the vibrations started to cause his CD to skip. “They’d better hurry up; I don’t have one of those fancy anti-shock walkmans!”

    “<The more you whine, the slower I’ll go,>” boomed a voice. The group turned to see Prometheus’ form slithering down the path towards them. Atlas stopped moving his tail and craned his head towards his friend.

    “It’s about time!” Kevin shouted.

    Prometheus pitched his head forward, allowing Jeff and Corphish to fall from his maw to the ground. “<I think I’d rather waltz with Daggerback than travel in the big snake’s mouth again,>” Corphish said as he shuddered.

    As Jeff got to his feet, Corphish’ words reminded him. “Daggerback attacked us in Mirage Tower.”

    Exclamations of shock rang out from the group. Until that point, Treecko hadn’t been paying attention. He walked over and stared at Jeff. “<What was he doing there?>”

    “I’m not sure why he was there, but one thing’s for sure: he’s after the fossil we have.”

    “Why would he be after that?” Rachel asked.

    “Does that mean he followed you guys to the tower?” added Blane.

    Jeff folded his arms and thought. “He said he was like a mercenary... He had a client who wanted it.” He glanced over to Blane. “...And no. He was there before me and seemed as surprised as I was when we crossed paths.”

    “That’s weird... Why would he be in an old tower in the middle of the desert?” Kevin questioned.

    Silence over took the group for a few moments until Jeff suddenly said, “I’ve got it!” All eyes looked to him. “I remember watching a TV special about it...”

    “<Ah, TV... Is there anything you can’t do?>” Corphish asked affectionately.

    “...Anyways, they were saying that a bunch of palaeontologists and archaeologists were digging up stuff there, until it was proclaimed a historical site and unsafe for excavation, which explains the abandoned excavation sites I saw.”

    “<I told you to stay near the door!>” Prometheus barked.

    Jeff chuckled sheepishly. “I must have misheard?”

    “Get to the point already, Jeff,” Kevin said.

    “I would if people would stop interrupting me,” he replied, glaring. “So, palaeontologists dig up fossils, right? And what’s Daggerback trying to get from us?”

    “Fossils...” Kevin said.

    “So, it’s safe to assume he was there looking for fossils when you showed up,” deduced Rachel.

    Jeff nodded and took the shower curtain-protected fossil out of his to check on it. “Yeah... As he was about to take the fossil, I remember him saying ‘Now I have all seven’ or something. That means he must have found the fossils he was looking for in Mirage Tower.”

    “<While that may be...>” Corphish said matter-of-factly, striding in a smug, detective-like fashion to the center of the group. “<It would appear that he now only has five.>” With that, Corphish opened his left pincer and allowed a grapefruit-sized rock to fall to the grass.

    Jeff stare blankly at the water pokemon. “...Corphish... is that a fossil?” Corphish nodded while grinning widely. “Did I ever tell you I loved you?”

    “<No... but I assumed it anyways.>”

    Kevin cleared his throat and stepped forward. “They’re just fossils. What’s the big deal? I mean, if he’ll stop chasing you guys when he has all the fossils, why not give them to him?”

    “First, Kevin, it’s because at least two of these fossils are stolen from Rustboro. Second, who would hire a mercenary to go find fossils instead of a professional science team? And who has the resources to pay that mercenary not with money, but with a heaping load of various items of whatever he asks for? Whoever it is obviously has a lot of money and they probably resorted to more dubious tactics of getting what they want when the museum refused to sell the two fossils they had to them. Of course, this is all speculation.”

    “Alright, so what do we do with the fossils?” asked Blane.

    Jeff shrugged. “...I’m not sure, but I think we should keep these two for now. Whoever Daggerback’s client is... I dunno, I just think it’s for more than just collecting purposes. I don’t like it.”

    “That’s all fine and great,” said Kevin, “but let’s not forget why we’re out here in the first place! To beat the pants off gym leaders!” To that, Treecko nodded in agreement. “So let’s go to Lavaridge Town!”

    Jeff sighed. “Yeah, okay...” He glanced over to Atlas, who was looking at him. Upon making eye contact with Jeff, Atlas quickly looked away. “...Let’s go then.”

    Prometheus looked down at Kevin. “<You. I’m staying out here with my friend, understood?>”

    “Fine by me,” answered Kevin, whose attention was caught by the shower curtain in Jeff’s hand. “Yo, Jeff... Do you still have all the stuff from the hotel in your bag after Daggerback attacked?”

    Jeff glanced at him and shrugged. “Daggerback sorta dumped it all out.”

    Kevin let out a cry. “NOOOOOOOO! ...Do you still have the lemon in there?”

    “...Yes.”

    “Sweet.”
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    xDD, the lemon. Oh, Kevin. I don't even know why he's so fixated on that lemon anyway, but that was an awesome way to end the chapter. xP It especially worked since we were reminded of Kevin's kleptomania in the hotel room earlier on when Daggerback was rifling through Jeff's bag, which also rekindled memories of the, ahem, lemon scene for me, so there was no "Wait, what lemon?" with this ending here. It was already at the front of my mind, and it just worked.

    And speaking of Daggerback, this chapter did well to up his status from an almost comic relief villain who can't easily be taken seriously to a genuine threat. Rather than him just doing his villainous stuff apparently because he feels like it, you've given him motive and background with this whole mercenary thing - and I can guess who his client might be, too, thanks to that opening scene. Now I have to wonder what our water-loving "Mister K" wants all seven fossils for. That and Daggerback did a fairly impressive job of holding his captives and getting what he wanted from them here, and it's only down to several lucky breaks and jammy moves that Jeff and Corphish just about managed to deny him and escape. The combination of those two together in a dangerous situation was a fun one, I thought, with Corphish trying to wiseass his way out of everything and the two of them working together pretty well even though they don't have such a strong bond as Jeff and Treecko (sometimes) do. And I loved their escape and how you portrayed the sheer wtf-ery of the fact that, from Daggerback's point of view, they just got randomly eaten by a passing Onix. xD

    It would have been nice for there to have been an indication of what fossils the two they've got now are. This might just be because I'm curious and can't remember what the one they first stole from Daggerback was, but. And while I'm mentioning small things that were off, I thought the Steelix was called Cronus, not Kronos (and didn't this come up in an MSN conversation a while ago and all)? Then there was your usual bit of odd/clunky wording, but it really wasn't all that frequent or severe; I rarely had to read over something again because I didn't get it the first time, and it didn't detract from the fact that this was overall a pretty solid chapter. Nice work.

    Oh, and I was about a page or so into the Daggerback scene when a certain theme tune tried to push its way into my head. It's a good thing I haven't listened to the actual thing in ages, or I'd have been doomed. =P
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    Quote Originally Posted by elyvorg View Post
    xDD, the lemon. Oh, Kevin. I don't even know why he's so fixated on that lemon anyway, but that was an awesome way to end the chapter. xP It especially worked since we were reminded of Kevin's kleptomania in the hotel room earlier on when Daggerback was rifling through Jeff's bag, which also rekindled memories of the, ahem, lemon scene for me, so there was no "Wait, what lemon?" with this ending here. It was already at the front of my mind, and it just worked.
    Oh, we'll find out Kevin's motive behind that lemon in due time... In actuality, that lemon is the key to the whole story! ... Or it could just be a citrus fruit. I guess we'll find out. =P

    Quote Originally Posted by elyvorg View Post
    And speaking of Daggerback, this chapter did well to up his status from an almost comic relief villain who can't easily be taken seriously to a genuine threat. Rather than him just doing his villainous stuff apparently because he feels like it, you've given him motive and background with this whole mercenary thing - and I can guess who his client might be, too, thanks to that opening scene. Now I have to wonder what our water-loving "Mister K" wants all seven fossils for. That and Daggerback did a fairly impressive job of holding his captives and getting what he wanted from them here, and it's only down to several lucky breaks and jammy moves that Jeff and Corphish just about managed to deny him and escape. The combination of those two together in a dangerous situation was a fun one, I thought, with Corphish trying to wiseass his way out of everything and the two of them working together pretty well even though they don't have such a strong bond as Jeff and Treecko (sometimes) do. And I loved their escape and how you portrayed the sheer wtf-ery of the fact that, from Daggerback's point of view, they just got randomly eaten by a passing Onix. xD
    Thanks, I'm happy that worked out. As awesome as it'd be to have seen Daggerback wearing a cape and riding a hot pink motorcycle... =P. That's a good question, why would he want these fossils? Hmm..

    Heh, yeah. Jeff and Corphish's dynamics are pretty fun, but I guess that could be said for Corphish and anybody's. Ironically, Jeff and Corphish might have the most solid teamwork at this point, given Jeff's relationship with his other pokemon. xD Yeah, that escape was amusing to write. Unfortunately for the escapees, Daggerback had to remember Atlas.

    Quote Originally Posted by elyvorg View Post
    It would have been nice for there to have been an indication of what fossils the two they've got now are. This might just be because I'm curious and can't remember what the one they first stole from Daggerback was, but. And while I'm mentioning small things that were off, I thought the Steelix was called Cronus, not Kronos (and didn't this come up in an MSN conversation a while ago and all)? Then there was your usual bit of odd/clunky wording, but it really wasn't all that frequent or severe; I rarely had to read over something again because I didn't get it the first time, and it didn't detract from the fact that this was overall a pretty solid chapter. Nice work.
    Ah, yeah. I might get to those two fossils soon. We'll see. As for Kronus/Cronos/Cronus/Kronos... I'll have to go and check. xD. I think we did have a conversation about that recently, but I forgot what the outcome was. Yeah, I'm slowly making progress with the awkward wording. I've at least improved with the adverb thing. xD

    Quote Originally Posted by elyvorg View Post
    Oh, and I was about a page or so into the Daggerback scene when a certain theme tune tried to push its way into my head. It's a good thing I haven't listened to the actual thing in ages, or I'd have been doomed. =P
    xDD. Thanks a lot; now I've got Warehouse Tiger stuck in my head. xP
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    First, let's hit your grammar errors, shall we?

    He levelled his pincers with Daggerbacks legs and let loose a tremendous volley of bubbles.
    Daggerback's

    Daggerback angrily swung his tail around, which managed to catch Jeff’s and send him careening to the ground as well.
    Jeff's what?

    Jeff turned and saw Daggerback at the doorwar.
    doorway

    Corphish and Jeff vs Daggerback must have been one of the best wild pokemon battles I've read in a long time. Maybe it's because we usually don't see them, but it was cool on a whole new level. Corppy and Kevin carry the funniest moments day with some pretty interesting scenes, like:

    “You... GOT IT!” Jeff shouted, swinging around his arm and throwing a pokeball at Daggerback once more. However, this time Daggerback expected it and he swatted the object downwards so that it hit the stone floor between Jeff and himself. This time, a bright light erupted from the sphere and a familiar Corphish emerged. The water pokemon noticed Jeff and immediately after noticed a large violet figure opposite the human. His gaze slowly shifted to the massive pokemon and eventually turned upwards to lock eyes with Daggerback.

    He before he could even open his mouth, Daggerback grabbed Corphish by the neck with his other hand and shoved him against the wall beside his trainer. The orange shellfish winced and glanced over to Jeff beside him. “<Don’t worry, Jeff; I’m here to save you...>” he said sheepishly.

    Jeff groaned while Daggerback glared at the two of them. “<Nice to see you again, little Corphish,>” the Nidoking said with a sneer.

    “<Actually, you can call me ‘Lord Protector Corphish’. Even ‘Sir Corphish’ will do... but yeah, long time no see, Daggerbutt the Aggressor!>”

    “<That’s ‘Daggerback the Oppressor’!>” he growled, pushing Corphish against the wall with increased force.

    “<Heh, that’s what I meant!>”
    Daggerbutt... that killed me... :P

    “<Ah, TV... Is there anything you can’t do?>” Corphish asked affectionately.
    It can't toast a waffle.

    “Fine by me,” answered Kevin, whose attention was caught by the shower curtain in Jeff’s hand. “Yo, Jeff... Do you still have all the stuff from the hotel in your bag after Daggerback attacked?”

    Jeff glanced at him and shrugged. “Daggerback sorta dumped it all out.”

    Kevin let out a cry. “NOOOOOOOO! ...Do you still have the lemon in there?”

    “...Yes.”

    “Sweet.”
    Oh-kayyy...

    So the gang get back on the road and Daggerbutt... i mean Daggerback's gonna feel something stupid and so out for payback the next time he and Jeff cross paths.

    Sweet chappie, dude! Top-notch all the way!

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    Finally, I've managed to answer your call! Halle-friggin'-lujah!

    Before I start on this, I've got a little piece of my mind to give to you about the positioning of your hyphens...

    I've been noticing that most of the hyphens that are placed in your work is not quite given enough space in between.

    I'll show you one given example:

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “Well…” Blane said. “You send the pokeball to your local professor - in your case, Professor Birch - and have him program it to accept Atlas, using the data he received when you caught him, and then you get the pokeball sent back.”
    In this case, those hyphens were used as a substitute for the semicolon. In this case, hyphens should be given some space on both ends, not just on the right, here.

    If it's used when someone is getting cut off, such as in this...

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    Jeff rolled his eyes. “Return, Corp.” He returned the water type to the pokeball and looked over to Daedalus. He looked at the other pokeball in his hand and felt guilt flood through him. “Dae, I won’t make you go in-”

    “<It’s fine. Why would I want to be out here anyways?>” he snappily said.
    ...then its positioning is perfectly acceptable.

    Now that this is out of the way, it time for the meat of this.
    *busts out his microscopic sights*

    For "Deserted"

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    “<Howdy, pardner,>” Corphish said with an innocent smile.

    The wood gecko looked back forwards and closed his eyes.

    “<Come on, Treeck! I just wanna hang out!>”
    That gecko is as stiff as a board if you ask me...

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<Hungry?>” Piplus asked, watching the Corphish with amusement.
    I've noticed that Air Dragon got this before I did, but this has been left unchecked, & thus, I'll give you a stern reminder for him/her: that's Piplup.

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    He sneered at Kevin, not giving up yet. “Well maybe I’ll give Corphish a gun. You know how much he likes the Die Hard movies.”

    The blonde haired boy froze with fear. “N-Not cool…”
    That's $&%#ing rich, but what'll be even more so was if he gave him a big-#%$ shotgun! That'll open people's eyes widely!

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    “Why do you say tha-” Jeff cut himself off upon hearing a series of cracks. He and Kevin looked over to see that Atlas had unwittingly crushed the open pokeball with his heavy body.
    *sigh* That's @%#$ing wonderful, people...

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    Everyone looked at Jeff, who let out a sigh of reluctant agreement. "Well, when something hits that gash in his face," Jeff said, pausing for effect as he gave a brief, over-the-shoulder glare at Treecko, "he goes wild." The Nurse Joy from Slateport said that it had something to do with iron and a nerve. I’m not really sure, but I have to treat it like once a day or something.”
    An excess quote; that can be done away with.

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    "Well, Blane," Kevin began, "I figured out that a way for both Prometheus and Jeff to go- Prometheus to find Atlas and Jeff to give him the medicine- without Jeff having to worry about being torn up by the sandstorm, is for Jeff to be transported in Pro’s mouth.”

    Prometheus sneered. “<It’s ’Prometheu-’…>” He cut himself off as he backtracked to what Kevin had said. Like Jeff, his eyes also widened.

    “I don’t want to be in an Onix’s mouth!”

    “<I don’t want a human in my mouth!>”
    Getting inside an Onix's mouth?? If it has nothing to do with being a dentist, I'd raise an eyebrow over that idea as well.

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “Mirage Tower…” Jeff said, almost at a murmur, as he looked up at the sizable tower. He remembered learning about this tower on TV. They were doing a lot of careful digs and excavations inside and around the tower, though people who wanted the tower preserved and untouched in its entirity barred any further official digs.
    Entirety...

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    Two loud stomps could be heard as the silhouette turned to face him. The form was indeed familiar to Jeff. Way too familiar. A small, singular ray of light that made its way through a small crack in the wall and illuminated the creature’s face as it suddenly stepped forwards. The human saw the face of a Nidoking that donned an eye-patch over his right eye.

    “…Daggerback…” he whispered in shock.

    The Nidoking stared at him in shock, but soon a malicious grin crawled onto his face. “<Well… my day just got better.>”
    Ruh roh... You were missing something...

    Hmm... I thought that I saw something else that was missing around here, but it's possible that my eyes were playing tricks on me...

    For "Fossil Fuels"

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    (Sorry it took so long. Had exams and stuff. Also, I'm sure Daggerback is happy that he won Best Non-Human Villain... even though the only person he was competing against was himself. So, good job beating, uhh, yourself, Daggerback.)
    Well, Hoo-friggin'-rah, Mr. Griffin. He should be proud of himself!

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “Well, maybe you misplaced it- Go!” Jeff suddenly shouted, ripping Treecko’s pokeball from the pocket and throwing it at Daggerback’s face. The ball hit the poison pokemon in the cheek before bouncing off, ricocheting to the ground, and opening.

    As Daggerback glanced down at it, Jeff closed his eyes to brace himself for the bright light that always came with the opening of a pokeball. He gave it a few moments before opening his eyes and looking around triumphantly at the spot where he threw it.

    ...The pokeball was found to be completely empty. Jeff then looked to Daggerback, who stood beside it while still pinning Jeff to the wall, tapping his food impatiently and donning a level, not amused stare. Jeff chuckled sheepishly upon realizing that Treecko was back with the others.
    *sigh* Another facepalm moment... #%&$ing wonderful...

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “You... GOT IT!” Jeff shouted, swinging around his arm and throwing a pokeball at Daggerback once more. However, this time Daggerback expected it and he swatted the object downwards so that it hit the stone floor between Jeff and himself. This time, a bright light erupted from the sphere and a familiar Corphish emerged. The water pokemon noticed Jeff and immediately after noticed a large violet figure opposite the human. His gaze slowly shifted to the massive pokemon and eventually turned upwards to lock eyes with Daggerback.
    Now we're talking!

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    He before he could even open his mouth, Daggerback grabbed Corphish by the neck with his other hand and shoved him against the wall beside his trainer. The orange shellfish winced and glanced over to Jeff beside him. “<Don’t worry, Jeff; I’m here to save you...>” he said sheepishly.
    1. Remove that, & in turn...
    2. ...Capitalize that "b" in "before"

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<Actually, you can call me ‘Lord Protector Corphish’. Even ‘Sir Corphish’ will do... but yeah, long time no see, Daggerbutt the Aggressor!>”

    “<That’s ‘Daggerback the Oppressor’!>” he growled, pushing Corphish against the wall with increased force.

    “<Heh, that’s what I meant!>”
    Way to poke fun at Daggerback, though it'll most likely get you killed if you can't back that up...

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<Anyways, the fossil... It went missing after he and that Treecko escaped from me and gave me this!>” Daggerback said while turning his head to show more clearly the eye patch on his face.

    “<It really brings out your... eye! You’ve got the whole ‘bad boy’ look down; a lot of girls really dig that. Did anyone tell you that you’d look good in pink?>” Corphish rambled.

    Daggerback sneered and slammed his tail onto the floor with a crash. “<Stop stalling!>”
    The mud-slinging never stops, doesn't it?

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<I feel so much better now...>” Corphish murmured with an accompanying roll of his eyes. “<Hey, Needlenose, why do you want a fossil so bad anyways? Are you a big dinosaur enthusiast or somthing?>”
    Something!! You're embarrassing yourself, here!

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<No, shellfish... It just so happens that I’m a mercenary.>”

    “A mercenary?” Jeff asked in shock. “A pokemon mercenary?”

    “<What? You’re not the only human that can communicate with pokemon, ya know. And as ya know, pokemon can often do things that humans can’t. Some people take advantage of that fact, ‘cept I take advantage of them by making a living offa it.>”
    He's a merc?! That's a hell of a twist...

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<Let’s see here...>” Daggerback said as he began throwing the items he found to the ground. “<Soaps, shampoos, a toothbrush, conditioners, hair mousse... bath salts? ...What are you doing? Travelling? Or starting a spa?>” he asked with a raised eyebrow.

    Jeff grimaced and blushed slightly. “Damn it, Kevin... That’s the last time I ever take you to a hotel.

    “<A clock radio, brochures, a telephone, various wires...>” Daggerback continued.
    Now, what the hell is going on in Kevin's brain?? Is that guy so much of a cheap-skate that he has to take stuff from a hotel? I do agree with Jeff; he should stop taking him on his travels, or at the very least, toss him out into the curb!

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<Crap!>” Corphish sputtered, running to aid his friend. The water pokemon clamped his right pincer down on Daggerback’s tail and squeezed, but the Nidoking’s hold continued.

    “Try Crabhammer!” advised Jeff in a panic.

    Corphish complied and began pounding his water-soaked claw down on Daggerback’s tail. The behemoth of a pokemon grimaced with pain, but tried to remain holding onto Jeff as he got to his feet. “<Why can’t I be a Machoke of a Corphish?>” Corphish muttered.

    Come on! You can do better than that!!


    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “Give it all you’ve got in one blow, Corp!”

    Corphish nodded, raised his claw over his head and jumped to the best of his ability into the air. He brought down his pincers onto Daggerback’s tail in a powerful strike. The Nidoking growled in pain and his tail tensed up upon being struck before slackening and allowing Jeff to remove his foot.
    That's more like it!

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    Daggerback smirked. “<Don’t bother fighting back. You don’t have anywhere to run and you both know I’m stronger than you. Don’t worry; I’ll make sure you two won’t->”

    The Nidoking’s voice cut out and his eyes widened upon seeing something behind the trapped two. The massive head of an Onix burst through the swirling wall of sand, past the doorway and into the tower. Without so much as a word, it scooped Jeff and Corphish into its mouth and disappeared just as quickly back into the sandstorm.

    Daggerback stood there in pure and utter shock as he watched his two prisoners seemingly get eaten by an Onix completely out of the blue. His eye twitched and his extended, pointing arm trembled slightly.
    I should've seen his face during that time...

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “<That... was... unexpected...>” he managed through his shock.

    Of course, it wasn’t long until he remembered that Jeff had an Onix, to which a mighty roar of frustration followed...
    That is most likely one of those "Laugh like Aku" moments.

    Quote Originally Posted by Griff4815 View Post
    “Fine by me,” answered Kevin, whose attention was caught by the shower curtain in Jeff’s hand. “Yo, Jeff... Do you still have all the stuff from the hotel in your bag after Daggerback attacked?”

    Jeff glanced at him and shrugged. “Daggerback sorta dumped it all out.”

    Kevin let out a cry. “NOOOOOOOO! ...Do you still have the lemon in there?”

    “...Yes.”

    “Sweet.”
    That... guy... is... mental...

    Do I need to say more?

    To wrap this up, this was most definitely an action-packed chapter, something that'll get my bloodfrenzy going. I'm not sure if I'm getting rusty, but if I get the initiative on your next chapter, maybe I'll find out...
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    Corphish and Jeff vs Daggerback must have been one of the best wild pokemon battles I've read in a long time. Maybe it's because we usually don't see them, but it was cool on a whole new level. Corppy and Kevin carry the funniest moments day with some pretty interesting scenes
    Heh, thanks. When writing it, I didn't really think of it as a wild battle, but I guess it is, technically.

    It can't toast a waffle.
    That depends what channel you set it to. =P

    So the gang get back on the road and Daggerbutt... i mean Daggerback's gonna feel something stupid and so out for payback the next time he and Jeff cross paths.

    Sweet chappie, dude! Top-notch all the way!
    That guy always wants payback. xD But I agree, he's going to be angrier.

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    That gecko is as stiff as a board if you ask me...
    Heh, Treecko isn't big on fun and games.

    Way to poke fun at Daggerback, though it'll most likely get you killed if you can't back that up...
    Nah, just beaten to a pulp, as said by Daggerback himself. =P

    The mud-slinging never stops, doesn't it?
    With Corphish around? Never.

    Now, what the hell is going on in Kevin's brain?? Is that guy so much of a cheap-skate that he has to take stuff from a hotel?
    Nah, he's just incredibly... let's say... opportunistic. He rationalizes by paying for a hotel room, he thus bought everything inside as well. =P

    I should've seen his face during that time...
    His expression would be the sameas one he'd have if a giant foot suddenly came from the sky and crushed Jeff and Corphish in front of him.

    That is most likely one of those "Laugh like Aku" moments.
    I'm not sure what that means.

    Anyways, thanks for the review! Hopefully I'll be able to get my next chapter done faster.
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    Whoosh I read it now because..well, procastinating this weekend is easier to do. =P And others already pointed out errors it appears...

    Anyways this was quite a good chapter, and very enjoyable. I liked the battle and how it turned out - nice action and use of delaying tactics, with some luck thrown in, and onix with a sense of good timing as well. XD 'Twas a nice end to the battle there, although not amusing as the end to the chapter itself as elyvorg said - that was quite simply very well done, that bit. XDDD

    As usual Corphish was entertaining, even when in the face of Daggerbutt danger itself. =P Agree that the teamwork between him and Jeff was strong and fun to read about as well.

    Hurrah for plot relevations about the fossils as well - I presume we'll see Daggerback again then, the fine self-beating-villain that he is. =P

    Kevin lay back in the sandy grass with his hands behind his head, relaxing as if he didn’t have a care in the world.
    Hmm, idk, just that the beginning of the sentences sounds odd to me. Maybe just add a 'down' after 'back'? =/
    “<Ah, TV... Is there anything you can’t do?>” Corphish asked affectionately.
    XD Sounds nearly a reference as well actually (but without donuts). XD
    And lastly:
    xDD. Thanks a lot; now I've got Warehouse Tiger stuck in my head. xP
    I'm just going to not help you with that and link you to the epic version of that song. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i5srC...eature=related =D

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    Quote Originally Posted by bobandbill View Post
    Whoosh I read it now because..well, procastinating this weekend is easier to do. =P And others already pointed out errors it appears...

    Anyways this was quite a good chapter, and very enjoyable. I liked the battle and how it turned out - nice action and use of delaying tactics, with some luck thrown in, and onix with a sense of good timing as well. XD 'Twas a nice end to the battle there, although not amusing as the end to the chapter itself as elyvorg said - that was quite simply very well done, that bit. XDDD
    Heh, thanks. I was wondering how many people would pick up on the lemon joke. =P

    As usual Corphish was entertaining, even when in the face of Daggerbutt danger itself. =P Agree that the teamwork between him and Jeff was strong and fun to read about as well.

    Hurrah for plot relevations about the fossils as well - I presume we'll see Daggerback again then, the fine self-beating-villain that he is. =P
    That's good. We may see more of that in the future. And you presume correct! We haven't seen the last of him yet.

    XD Sounds nearly a reference as well actually (but without donuts). XD
    A reference to what? The Simpsons? *thinks*

    I'm just going to not help you with that and link you to the epic version of that song. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i5srC...eature=related =D

    Keep it up!
    xD Great, thanks. Just what Daggerback's ego needs, his theme song in full orchestra. xD Now to listen to that song in better quality in windows media player. =P

    Thanks for the review!
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    This is a good, but LONG(ish) fanfic. I am only on page 11 but i LOVE it! Treeko... brawley...atlas..sad.












































































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    Thanks for the review. It gets better.




























    lol.
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    K schools out so i finaly got to read it all! plz add me to the pm list.
    oh and once on page 14 you reffered to nurse joy as a he lol!
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    Cool. Consider yourself added.

    Augh, you won't believe my bad luck. I wrote my latest chapter and I had literally a couple paragraphs left and my laptop shuts down. The harddrive is fried or something. I'm still hoping we can fix it, but there's no promises. I really hope it can be salvaged; that chapter was really long and if I lose it, my motivation for rewriting it will take a big blow (though I will still rewrite it, just to spite it.)

    So yeah, hang tight until I figure something out, I suppose.
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    good fic, i only see one weird thing:











    “You ready for a fresh start?” he asked his reflection. Despite the fact that it was a rhetorical question, he still didn’t answer. “…Me neither, but too bad. It’s worth a try!”

    a rhetorical question is one you don't want answered















    and whats up with all the greek myth names?
    like, all named pokemon but blitz have greek myth names....................................
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    Quote Originally Posted by Chimpchar View Post
    good fic, i only see one weird thing:











    “You ready for a fresh start?” he asked his reflection. Despite the fact that it was a rhetorical question, he still didn’t answer. “…Me neither, but too bad. It’s worth a try!”

    a rhetorical question is one you don't want answered















    and whats up with all the greek myth names?
    like, all named pokemon but blitz have greek myth names....................................

    Heh, thanks. I'll be sure to fix that.

    For the names... let's see. All the Onix and Steelix from the Onix clan in Dewford are named after titans, which kinda fits their massive stature. "Atlas" and "Prometheus" also fits their personalities.

    And I named Daedalus that because it sounded cool. =P

    I don't think Avis, Ace and Strix are from Greek mythology. Avis is either Greek or Latin for "bird". Also Drezdk isn't from Greek mythology. It's just a Beedrillian name.
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    **STATUS UPDATE**

    It's been way too long since the last chapter for reasons that I'm sure I've talked about. Anyways, I'm making myself rewrite this chapter. Unfortunately, I had to skip a battle scene that I originally had planned, but to compensate, this chapter is going to cover things that I planned to do in the next chapter. So I am working on it and it will be up sometime. Stay tuned!
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    it better be SOON


    if it takes 2 more months it'll of been 1 year!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    It won't be two months. I'm on the brink of catching up to where I was last time. Unfortunately, in Pokemon White and Black, they did something similar to what I had planned for later on in NITWOMP, prior to playing the games. Hopefully the two characters will be different enough so that it won't matter though. I think they'll only really be similar ideologically.
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    kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
    HOW MUCH LONGER?????



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    Quote Originally Posted by Chimpchar View Post
    kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
    HOW MUCH LONGER?????



    sorry, i get upset when i run out of good fan-fics to read
    I may or may not be done now, actually. I'm going to confer with my beta to see if I should end my chapter now or extend it a bit like I had originally planned. Then it has to be beta'd.
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    The Meteor Stratagem


    The orange sun cast its setting light down upon the ravine. High cliffs and mountains flanked the deep U-shaped valley from both sides. The gleaming orb had not yet passed behind the mountains at the end of the pass, so the entire area was still swathed in orange.

    The travelling group headed westward, towards the mountainous terrain and away from the desert behind them. Even the two Onixes, Atlas and Prometheus, felt small in comparison to the tall cliffs and the even taller mountains all around.

    Prometheus slithered ahead, slightly in front of Atlas. They both carried passengers on their backs.

    “Yo, Pro, can’t you go any faster? I want to get to Lavaridge before nightfall... or at least before I turn sixty!” Kevin called up from his place in front of Rachel on Prometheus’s back.

    Prometheus let out a low growl. “<It’s ‘Prometheus’... Don’t push your luck, little creature,>” he warned. “<And I thought we weren’t going to make a habit of riding on our backs.>”

    “Hey, if you want to stick around, you’re going to have to pull your weight,” Kevin said with a grin.

    “<It seems more like we’re pulling your weight!>” Prometheus retorted.

    “...Are you calling me fat? Or... ohh, I get it. If me and Rache are too heavy for the great big, tough Onix, it’s okay; I understand. We can get off if you can’t handle it,” Kevin goaded.

    “<I never said that,>” Prometheus snapped. “<You’re about as light as a pebble. And as insignificant as one, too!>” The large reptile then craned his head around while slithering. “<And if you two start making out while you’re back there, I will start bucking. I promise you that, old son.>”

    “Oh, I get it; you want Rachel all to yourself,” Kevin remarked.

    As Prometheus bristled, Rachel tapped Kevin in the shoulder. “What did he say?” she asked, still unable to understand pokemon.

    “He’s jealous that you want to make out with me,” the blonde teen answered her, still grinning.

    Rachel was taken aback and disgusted. “I’d make out with a Pinsir before I would you.”

    “If that Pinsir was the hottest, studliest Pinsir in the world then I could understand,” Kevin said, casting her a wink.

    Rachel shook her head and sighed just as Prometheus slowed down slightly, allowing Atlas to catch up. The scar-donned Onix slithered up beside his friend, though he hadn’t taken his eyes off of the ground the whole time ever since they left the desert.

    Treecko sat on top of Atlas’s head, leaning against the back of his large horn. Below was Jeff, Corphish, Piplup and Blane respectively. Jeff shifted uncomfortably and looked up at Atlas every so often before averting his gaze.

    Corphish glanced over at Prometheus and the group that rode on his back. “<Hey, can I switch rock snakes?>” he asked. “<It’s so tense over here that I feel like somebody’s going to explode! You guys are at least talking.>”

    “<Unfortunately,>” murmured Prometheus. The Onix glanced over at his friend. “<Hey, Atlas, are we going the right way?>”

    Atlas blinked his grey eyes and finally looked up from the ground, slightly confused. “<Uhh... what?>” he asked, glancing over.

    “<...Are we going the right way?>”

    “<Oh... Err... I was following you.>”

    Blane looked over at Rachel and signalled her. “Rache! Are we going the right way?”

    Rachel, who was looking at her handbook of Hoenn, nodded. “Yeah, we should be.”

    “<Good,>” Prometheus muttered, glancing over at Atlas with a curious expression. He then looked back forwards. “<Because if we- Holy Groudon’s scales!>” he exclaimed suddenly, his blue eyes widening as he looked forwards.

    “What’s up?” Kevin asked, balancing himself as Prometheus stopped suddenly.

    “<That mountain... It’s enormous!>” Prometheus said in utter awe. “<Look at it, Atlas!>”

    Atlas raised his head and looked up. His eyes, too, widened. Behind the cliffs and peaks stood a titan of a mountain that reached high into the sky. It was nowhere near tall enough to touch the clouds, but the rocky monument still dwarfed everything around it. The cliffs around it were like a stairway leading up to the dark, colossal peak. The mountain seemed to flatten out on top, making a wide plateau. Waves of heat rose from the top.

    “<It’s incredible!>” Prometheus gushed. “<It’s as if Lord Groudon himself could live under it!>”

    “That’s Mount Chimney,” Rachel pointed out, looking down at her book. “Apparently it’s a dormant volcano. It says when standing on top, you should be able to see most of Hoenn.”

    “<D-Dormant volcano?>” Corphish stammered, his eyes widening.

    “Dormant means inactive, Corphish,” Jeff reassured him.

    “<Jeff...> Corphish said with the utmost urgency and seriousness in his voice. “<Don’t you watch movies? There is no... such... thing... as a dormant volcano. All it takes is a loose stone... or scientists prodding at it... or the wrath of Arceus... or an evil mastermind...>” he explained, his grip tightening around Jeff’s waist considerably.

    “Corphish... too tight...” Jeff gasped.

    “Yeah, it’s breathtaking,” Blane said, looking at the mountain. “But we’re faced with something more important... There’s a dead end ahead of us...” He pointed forwards from atop Atlas’s back, gesturing to where the grassy valley suddenly stopped and met with more cliffs that led towards the tall peak. “How are we supposed to get to Lavaridge?”

    “There’s a cable car,” Kevin answered. “You take it to the top of Mount Chimney and then go south down Jagged Pass.”

    “<And then KABLOOEY!>” Corphish shouted, finishing his pop-culture fuelled theory and subsequently startling everyone on Atlas’ back (excluding Treecko).

    Prometheus looked over at Kevin. “<What’s... a cable car?>”

    “It’s a metal thing that you can ride inside to take you up to high places,” Blane told him.

    “Yeah...” Jeff said sheepishly as the group stopped at the dead end, now surrounded by cliffs on three sides. “Slight problem with that... Atlas can’t go inside his pokeball and there’s no way he’s fitting inside a cable car...”

    “Oh yeah...” Kevin mused. “Because somebody broke his pokeball!” His eyes rested on Jeff.

    “It was an accident...” Jeff muttered in a pouting fashion.

    “<We don’t need to be carried around in some small ball!>” Prometheus explained proudly. “<We’re Onix. Atlas and I can climb to the top of that mountain no problem!>” He looked over to his friend, awaiting confirmation from the other rock snake.

    Atlas nodded. “<We’ll be fine,>” he agreed while managing to avoid making eye contact with Jeff.

    “Are you sure? I don’t want it to seem like we’re abandoning you,” he said using choice words while casting a glance to Atlas. The Onix grimaced and slithered back a little so that he was partially hidden behind Prometheus.

    “<We can take care of ourselves just fine,>” Prometheus insisted. “<We’ve been doing so since long before we joined up with you.>”

    “Okay then,” Kevin said, hopping off of Prometheus’ back as the large rock pokemon came to a halt at the end of the pass. “You and Atlas climb to the top of the mountain and the rest of us will take the cable car!”

    “<Sounds good to me,>” said Prometheus, watching as Rachel slid off of his back after Kevin. Blane, Jeff, Corphish and Treecko also dismounted from Atlas.

    Kevin noticed this and grinned. “Pro, I know you have a thing for Rache, but try not to check her out all the time, okay?”

    The Onix sneered and glared at Kevin. “<I wasn’t! And I don’t! Rrrrrgh. We’re leaving, Atlas!>” he declared, leaping onto the cliff in front of them and slithering up it.

    “<Uhh...>” Atlas gave a quick glance to Jeff behind him and sighed. “<...Right.>” Atlas followed his friend and disappeared over the crest of the crag.

    The group braced themselves as several small pebbles showered down upon them from the Onixes’ movements. When it finally stopped, Blane looked to the group’s right. “I guess that’s the way to the cable car station, huh?” he asked.

    Everyone turned to the twenty foot cliff to their right and saw a set of stairs carved into the rock, leading up to a rocky plateau. They could see the wires of the cable car leading down over the crest of the plateau, so it was safe to assume the station was up there too.

    “Yeah, looks like it,” Rachel replied.

    “Well, what are we waiting for?!” Kevin asked, running towards the stairs. “I love the cable car!”

    “He’s like an annoying little kid,” Rachel said with a sigh.

    Jeff grinned and followed him at a controlled pace. “You don’t know the half of it.”

    Meanwhile, Corphish scuttled over to Treecko and tapped his shoulder with his pincers. Treecko glanced at him out of the corner of his eye before continuing forward. “<Treeck! You sure you’re okay with this? Aren’t you claustrophobic? You know, with the pokeball thing and all?>”

    Treecko narrowed his eyes. “<For the last time, I’m not claustrophobic...>”

    “<Then why don’t you like going in your pokeball?>” Corphish asked. Treecko ignored him and jumped up the steps, leaving Corphish to awkwardly pull himself up. “<Wait! My legs aren’t as long as yours!>”

    The group made it to the top of the plateau (some quicker than others) and looked around the area. The cable car wires led into an open, single story building. From inside, the humming of an engine could be heard.

    “Where’s Kevin?” Blane asked, looking around the rocky plateau, made up from a black, pyroclastic type of stone, caused from the nearby volcano.

    “Inside already, it looks like,” Jeff replied, walking towards the station. The group followed, though Corphish was finding it hard to traverse over the rough terrain. Jeff opened the door and saw Kevin standing inside a single room. He immediately surveyed the area and saw two benches flanking them from both sides of the room. In front of them, past Kevin, was a ticket gate spanning across the whole room, separating the waiting area from the cable car. The sound of the engine drew his attention, causing him to look over and see the cable car sitting idly in the dock. It was connected to an overhanging wire which was attached to a bullwheel in the terminal.

    “There’s nobody here,” Rachel mused. “Is it closed?”

    “If it was, why would they leave the door unlocked?” Blane replied. He then looked around and saw one of the benches overturned. “What happened in here?”

    “Magma,” Kevin growled shortly, his excited demeanour completely gone.

    “What?” Jeff asked, looking at the blonde haired teen, who still showed his back to them.

    Kevin slowly turned around and presented a red hood with two odd horn-like features. It looked as if it had been torn off from the rest of the sweater. “Team Magma was here...” he said venomously.

    Jeff’s eyes widened. “No way... Them?”

    Rachel and Blane cast each other confused looks. “Team Magma...?” Rachel asked. “Who are they?”

    Kevin crushed the piece of fabric in his palm and looked at Rachel with cold blue eyes. “You want to know who Team Magma is?” he asked angrily. “A bunch of nutjobs!”

    Blane couldn’t help but feel concerned by Kevin’s uncharacteristic anger. “Uhh... We’re not really from Hoenn, so do you think you could explain?”

    “They’re--” Jeff began but he was quickly interrupted.

    “Pretty much a cult of terrorists,” Kevin said fervently, finishing Jeff’s sentence.

    “Are they anything like Team Rocket from Kanto and Johto?” Rachel asked. “Before they dissolved for good, that is.”

    Kevin shook his head. “No... Team Rocket was just a bunch of petty criminals who robbed, extorted and performed a few corporate takeovers. Team Magma... these guys have a ‘grand plan’,” he said mockingly. “Team Magma actually wants to expand the world’s landmass by draining all the oceans! They think that that’s the best idea in the world! If that isn’t the most ridiculous thing you ever heard...”

    The blonde-haired teen threw the Team Magma hat to the side. “And these psychos don’t care what they have to do to achieve their goals! They actually think they’re doing the world a favour and that their ends justify the means!” Kevin grimaced and looked down at Ace’s pokeball. “They don’t even care what happens to the water pokemon...”

    Kevin grinned and looked back at Rachel and Blane. “And if you didn’t think Team Magma were frigging psychos, have a look at Team Aqua.”

    “You mean those two guys with the Gyarados who almost attacked us when we were travelling to Slateport?” Rachel asked.

    Kevin nodded. “They’re Team Magma’s rivals and their goals are the exact opposite. While Magma wants to expand the world’s landmass, Team Aqua wants to expand the world’s oceans. They want to flood the world!” Kevin explained, almost laughing and unnerving most of the others. “Now they must be crazy if they actually believe in that cause! If they were water pokemon, sure, but they’re humans!”

    The teen’s smile quickly disappeared. “Team Aqua may be crazier, but I’ll take them over Magma any day...”

    Several members of the group wanted to ask why, but they all thought better of it. Jeff looked over at the hat on the floor. “But what’s with the hat?”

    “Same reason that nobody’s here, I think,” Kevin replied. “Team Magma drove the cable car operators out. I guess they don’t want anybody going to the top of Mount Chimney.”

    “So what do we do?” Rachel asked.

    “Go to the top of Mount Chimney,” Kevin replied, his usual grin returning before he decided to jump over the ticket gate.

    “What?” Blane asked. “There’s nobody to operate the cable car!”

    Kevin grinned and took out a pokeball, aiming it behind the group. “Don’t you worry about that. Come on out, Blitz!” The large Scyther materialized behind the group and nodded at Kevin. Jeff couldn’t help but tense up and swing around. “Help me get these guys into the cable car!” he said, opening the cabin’s door and stepping inside the car.

    Blitz nodded and started ushering the three humans towards the ticket gate. Jeff lunged over it just to avoid Blitz’s scythes. Treecko and Corphish watched as the humans were herded into the car and they decided to follow them in.

    Kevin stood inside the metal car, waiting beside a pedestal where the control panel was. At the front and back of the car was a row of cushioned seats. Rachel, Blane and his Piplup sat at the front of the car while Jeff and his pokemon sat at the back. Blitz waited outside the car.

    “What are you thinking of doing, Kevin?” Jeff asked nervously.

    Kevin grinned. “The cable car is operated from within in the car itself by an operator who works the controls. I used to go on the cable car with my mom a lot as a kid, so I’m pretty sure I know how it works,” he explained, looking at the panel which had four buttons on it, two in the shape of arrows.

    Rachel and Blane’s eyes widened. “No way! You’re not serious!” Rachel protested frantically.

    Jeff stood up and stepped towards Kevin, hoping to stop him before things got out of hand. “Kevin, don’t you even think about i--”

    “Blitz, you follow us from beside. Allons-y!”

    Kevin slammed his index finger onto one of the arrows and the car started moving... The cabin jerked backwards into the terminal, colliding with the bullwheel. Kevin held onto the panel for support and Rachel and Blane were sent sprawling to the floor. Jeff let out a cry as he fell back on Corphish, pinning the poor crustacean against the seat.

    “<Maybe I’ll be reincarnated as a pokemon who can have an actually dignified death,>” Corphish wheezed as Jeff’s body pressed against him.

    “...Wrong button,” Kevin sheepishly explained after hitting the stop button. Blitz slapped the side of his scythe to his forehead and shook his head in exasperation at the bungle. Everyone on board shot Kevin a dirty glare as they composed themselves, getting back into their proper seats.

    Corphish brushed himself and backed over to the corner where Treecko sat. “<We’re going to die, aren’t we?>”

    “That’s very likely,” Jeff responded as Kevin slowly pressed the opposite arrow, causing the car to gently leave the station. Upon the cable car fully leaving the vacant terminal, Blitz flew out and followed beside them.

    Jeff gazed out at their Scyther escort nervously. He knew that Kevin was friends with him, but he just couldn’t bring himself to trust him. The teen subconsciously ran his fingers across the scar on his bicep. It was moments later that Jeff felt a tugging on his shirt. He looked down and saw Corphish looking up at him.

    “<Hey, Jeff? Can you release Dae and Drez?>” he asked. “<Treeck isn’t exactly a great conversationalist.>”

    Jeff paused and looked at the others. “I dunno... Would that be too much weight?” he asked warily.

    “<Jeez, Jeff. If you don’t want to let them out you can just say so; you don’t have to call them fat,>” Corphish said, attempting to fold his pincers.

    Kevin and Blane tittered and Rachel realized she must have missed another one of Corphish’s jokes. Jeff sighed and took out two pokeballs from his pocket. “Fine, but if the cord snaps, I’m using you for a cushion, Corphish.”

    “<Go right ahead,>” Corphish responded, brandishing the three orange spikes on his head.

    “Everybody – Kevin, especially – shield your eyes. I don’t want anybody pressing the wrong button,” Jeff said before releasing his two companions near the center of the car.

    From amidst the light materialized a Taillow and Beedrill, who were observing their surroundings in utter confusion.

    “<Excuse me... Where are we?>” Drezdk asked, prompted to press his fore stinger against the cabin’s glass in order to balance himself. “<And why do I feel so unbalanced?>”

    “We’re in a cable car,” Blane replied. “It’s a human-made thing that carries things to high up places. In this case, Mount Chimney.”

    Daedalus scoffed. “<If your kind needs a machine to scale mountains then you shouldn’t be scaling mountains. I don’t see why humans always have the need to overcompensate for their shortcomings by expanding their influences everywhere. Why can’t they just be happy with what they have like the rest of us are?>”

    Corphish frowned and stared at him. “<...Mister Grumpyfeathers.>”

    “<He does have a bit of a point,>” Drezdk said, looking out the window. “<I don’t mean any offense by that, but this doesn’t seem natural. I’m not sure a Beedrill has ever been so high off the ground before...>”

    “Hey, it gets us to the top of the mountain, doesn’t it?” Kevin asked rhetorically. “While we’re up there we can check out whether that Team Magma hat has anything to do with Mount Chimney or not.”

    “<Yeah, I’m sure the hat was the mastermind behind the whole thing,>” Corphish replied sarcastically.

    “You know what I mean,” Kevin answered, for once not breaking a grin at one of Corphish’s jokes.

    The water type raised his claws in a partial shrug and looked around. He took to climbing onto Jeff’s lap and gazing out the window. Upon seeing Blitz flying beside the car at a relaxed pace, he waved. The Scyther gave a slight, uncomfortable nod, looked forward and hastened his wing beats.

    “<Hmm... He seems awfully suspicious out there...>” Corphish mused, narrowing his eyes suspiciously.

    “Who? Blitz?” Kevin asked, casting a look his way.

    Corphish nodded. “<Our lives are basically in his scythes... his razor sharp scythes.>”

    “Corphish...” Jeff warned, shifting away from the window nervously.

    “<Like a Scytherian Grim Reaper...>” Corphish whispered. “<All he has to do is cut that cable and we all go splat! Maybe he has unfinished business... in Jeff!>” The water type turned and pointed his pincer dramatically at his trainer.

    By this point, Jeff was more nervous than a Steelix in the middle of the ocean with a child’s life preserver. He recoiled in terror, partially to avoid getting cuffed in the face by Corphish’s large claw. “What?!”

    Corphish lunged up onto Jeff’s chest, clutching his shirt with his pincers and glaring into his eyes. “<You! He couldn’t kill you last time, so now he wants to finish the job! With him out there and us in here, now’s his chance! All he has to do is->” Corphish snapped one of his claws shut in front of Jeff’s face, imitating the cutting of a wire, causing the human to jump. “<And then KABLOOEY!>”

    “...Why would the cable car explode, Corphish?” Blane asked, raising an eyebrow.

    Corphish gave him a dry stare. “<...Uhh, we’re right next to a volcano? I thought you trainers were supposed to be smart.>”

    “There’s ‘Corphish smart’ and then there’s ‘everybody else smart’,” Jeff deadpanned, trying to cover up the fact that his legs were trembling.

    “<Why, thank you, Jeff!>” Corphish replied happily, hopping down beside Daedalus and Drezdk.

    “<That was mean, you know,>” Daedalus whispered, gesturing to the inwardly terrified Jeff.

    Corphish giggled. “<I have to entertain myself somehow. Did I have you guys going?>”

    Drezdk looked at him and mused. “<Oh boy. Another pokemon with Talvoc’s sense of humour. What have I gotten myself into?>” he pondered. However, as Drezdk thought about his fallen friend, his face began to soften and he felt the need to retreat. The Beedrill backed away from Daedalus and Corphish, hopped up onto the soft bench and sat clumsily next to Jeff.

    Jeff, who was beginning to compose himself, looked down at Drezdk and offered a smile. “Err, hey. ...Sorry I didn’t let you out earlier. How are you feeling?”

    “<Think nothing of it,>” Drezdk politely replied. “<And I’m feeling much better...>”

    “<Physically,>” he mentally added.

    “I’m glad to hear it,” Jeff said, seeming to have forgotten about Blitz for the time being.

    As they began talking, Daedalus hopped up onto the windowsill, which was small enough to make him struggle to get a comfortable footing. From that vantage point, he looked out and observed the steep cliffy terrain below. He turned his head to the right and saw a patch of forest between the bottom of the lowest plateau and the desert to the east.

    He pressed his forehead against the glass and stared out at it. It wasn’t until he turned his head did he notice that Treecko was examining the same stretch of forest. Treecko momentarily glanced over at him before looking back out the rear window.

    “<...What?>” Daedalus asked him accusingly.

    “<Nothing,>” Treecko responded coolly, not taking his eyes off the emerald leaves far below them.

    The Taillow’s brow furrowed for a moment, but then he relaxed and gazed at the same place. “<Yeah, you caught me... I’m a little homesick,>” he murmured.

    “<Jeff said you could leave whenever you want,>” Treecko reminded him.

    “<I know...>” Daedalus spoke, closing his eyes. “<But I’m not going to. I don’t want to go back.>”

    “<You don’t? But you’re so happy to be with us...>” Treecko replied snarkily.

    Daedalus sighed. “<I know I’m not thrilled about Jeff’s whole badge quest, but... I have my reasons for not wanting to go back.>”

    “<You? The great leader?>” Treecko asked. “<I thought you’d jump at the chance to go back and lead your Taillows.>”

    The Taillow grimaced and placed his head against the window. “<Well...>” He turned and looked back at Treecko, hoping to change the subject. “<I can tell I’m not the only one who’s homesick.>”

    Treecko momentarily narrowed his eyes, but soon went back to appearing calm and collected. “<Think what you want...>”

    Daedalus did a 180 jump on the windowsill and faced Treecko, who glanced at him out of the corner of his eye. “<You can’t fool me, Treecko... I was there when Daggerback caught you. I saw the look on your face when you were tending to that tree. You really care about it, don’t you?>” Daedalus asked, knowing that he was right.

    Treecko balled up his fist and glared at Daedalus, refusing to show any sort of weakness to him. The Taillow stared right back at him before breaking a mild grin. “<It’s okay to care about it, you know...>”

    Treecko looked away, gazing back out the window while chewing on his twig. “<We’re here,>” he spoke just seconds before a large shadow overtook the car.

    Blane, Rachel and Kevin all turned around as the cable car pulled into a nearly identical terminal at the top of Mount Chimney. Jeff turned around and lunged out of his seat upon seeing that Blitz was on the other side of the window. The Scyther was directly behind him, following the car into the terminal.

    “Annnd stop!” Kevin decreed. He punched the button with his finger, bringing the car to a rocky stop in the terminal.

    Drezdk held onto Jeff for support, unaccustomed to the sudden shift in weight. Upon collecting himself he looked out the rear window, down the face of the dormant volcano. “<Strange... We came all that way without even beating a wing.>”

    “Yeah! Great, huh?” Kevin said, placing his hands on his hips and traipsing towards the door.

    Upon opening it, Kevin found Blitz standing in front of him. “<Kevin,>” the mantis pokemon said, speaking with a hint of urgency in his voice. “<I heard humans up here...>”

    Kevin’s face immediately grew serious and he turned to the others. “Be on your guard, everyone...”

    “Team Magma?” Jeff questioned, following the others off the cable car and into the empty terminal.

    “That’s my guess,” agreed Rachel, drawing Strix and Avis’ pokeballs just in case.

    “<Who?>” Drezdk asked Jeff with worry. “<I...I won’t have to kill anybody, right Jeff?>”

    Jeff looked down at the Beedrill reassuringly. “Of course not. I’d never ask you to do something like that. And I only want you to battle if you want to, okay?” he explained, placing his hand on Drezdk’s back.

    Drezdk nodded slowly. “<...Thank you.>”

    Blitz and Kevin hopped over the ticket gate and slinked over to the wall on each side of the door. The Scyther poked his head out and looked around. Outside the terminal was rock, rock and more rock. The ground was craggy and either red or black, depending on the part of the summit. Directly across from them, they could see the tips of trees which gradually grew shorter the further away they were. On the distance they could see far off forests due to the sheer height of Mount Chimney. The intense smell of sulphur entered the Scyther’s nostrils and caused him to cringe.

    “See anything, Blitz?” Kevin asked.

    “<No... I see no humans,>” he replied, still scanning the area. The Scyther’s hazel eyes lit up upon finding something else. “<Kevin, are those our Onix?>” He pointed with his scythe to two grey stalagmites that stood out against the other rocks, sticking up from behind the crest of the southern peak of the mountain.

    “Team Magma must be behind the terminal, closer to the center of the volcano,” Rachel said. “If Blitz was right about hearing human voices, that is.”

    “Don’t get him angry,” Jeff whispered, keeping a safe distance away from the insect pokemon.

    “<Closer to the center of the volcano?>” Corphish asked nervously. “<Arceus help us all...>” The water type’s eyes widened and he cupped his pincers over his mouth. “<I take it back! I didn’t say that! People who say that are always the first to die in disaster movies!>”

    Blane folded his arms and thought. “But if Team Magma is out there, how do we let Atlas and Prometheus know that we’re here without those guys seeing or hearing us? We don’t know if they’re a hundred feet away or ten.”

    “Maybe we could throw something at them,” Jeff suggested. He reached into his bag and pulled out a fruit. “How about this?” He brandished the lemon in front of him.

    Kevin’s eyes widened and he swung around to defiantly face his friend. “Jeff! You can’t throw that lemon! It’s an excellent source of vitamins!” He turned to the Scyther next to him. “Blitz, help him put it away.”

    “Okay! No lemon!” Jeff hastily said, throwing the fruit back in his backpack before the Scyther could get close to him. “So what’s your bright idea? We can’t just walk out there. We could be outnumbered for all we know and, like you said, these guys have extremist attitudes.”

    “I know...” Kevin said icily. “They might have guns, too.”

    “Guns?” Jeff asked aloud, perplexed. “What are you talking about, Kevin? The Hoenn National Gun Ban was ten years ago. All of the guns have been confiscated and their metals melted down and remade for other things. They don’t even make bullets anymore.”

    “Yeah?” Kevin responded sharply. “Then how come Blitz was shot by a farmer a month ago?”

    “He what?” Jeff asked, surprised.

    “<I was forced to steal some of his crops for sustenance,>” Blitz answered.

    Kevin’s eye twitched. “...Not the point I was trying to make, genius,” he said. “There are still old models in circulation. Sure they might not make guns anymore, but they’re not completely gone either.”

    Jeff still wasn’t convinced. “Just because some guy on some rural route that they overlooked has one--”

    “Look, I’m sure, okay?” Kevin interrupted with certainty in his voice. “...It’s possible.”

    “That’s all great,” Blane said while placing his Piplup on his shoulder. “But we still have the problem of contacting Atlas and Prometheus.”

    Jeff spoke up. “How about the--”

    “Don’t say ‘lemon’!” Kevin growled.

    “<I’ll do it,>” a calm yet determined voice said from behind them. The group turned and saw Treecko stepping towards the door.

    “Treecko?” Jeff asked, a little surprised. “How?”

    “<I’ll use Bullet Seed,>” he responded, narrowing his eyes.

    Jeff and several others looked sceptical. The teen rubbed the back of his neck. “Uhh, are you sure, Treeck?”

    Treecko internally bristled at Jeff’s lack of confidence in him. “<Yeah,>” he responded firmly.

    The wood gecko pokemon stepped into the doorway and took aim at one of the two stone horns. He raised his tail and gripped the ground with his feet for balance. Treecko then opened his mouth and inhaled. The energy was building inside his chest. He could feel it.

    When he was satisfied with his stance, he relaxed his hands. Treecko then let loose the attack, feeling the energy rush through from his chest. “Treeeeee ck--”

    Nothing happened.

    The humans and pokemon surrounding Treecko remained completely silent and shifted uncomfortably. The wood gecko pokemon grimaced for a split second but attempted to show himself as composed and aloof. He closed his eyes and relaxed his body, despite how frustrated he really was.

    Treecko centered his focus to the energy inside him once again. He was not about to give up. Oxygen seeped into his lungs from the breath he took and Treecko waited until he felt the energy within him make its way to his throat.

    “<I just have to focus on spitting them now. Just like I practiced,>” he thought.

    “Treeeeeeee,” he spoke, building up the energy and rearing his head back. “...Cko cko cko cko cko cko!”

    A salvo of eight glowing energy seeds burst from his throat and ripped through the air over the stretch of rocky terrain. Three of the eight hit their target: the horn on the right that was poking up from behind the peak. A deep rumbling voice began to roar, but it was suddenly muffled. The horn on the left rose up and the tip of an Onix’s head emerged, followed by a pair of grey eyes.

    Jeff could immediately recognize him as Atlas from the large scar running across his face. Prometheus angrily raised his head too, though his mouth was covered by the end of Atlas’ tail. Jeff and Kevin both hailed them by waving their hands. Atlas’s face lit up upon seeing them. The two Onixes both looked at each other and nodded. They both emerged over the small cliff and crawled towards the terminal as slowly and quietly as they could.

    Treecko, who seemed relatively content that he pulled off that second Bullet Seed, walked past the others and leaned against the ticket gate. He was still troubled, though, about the idea that he still didn't have complete control over it. He knew he had to try harder.

    The group watched as the two began to slither stealthily in their direction. As they did, Rachel turned to Blane. “What’s this about a gun ban?” she asked.

    “Oh yeah,” Blane replied. “Johto’s gun ban was put into effect before you were born, so you probably take it for a given. Johto, Unova, Hoenn and Sinnoh all passed legislation involving a gun ban. Many people were using guns for hunting pokemon, and that caused many wild pokemon to react violently to humans, so as a show of good will towards pokemon, mostly everybody agreed to the ban. Not only did pokemon deaths decrease, but so did human deaths, so it worked out well for everybody except the gun corporations. And since humans and pokemon join the military together now, guns are pretty much obsolete anyways since we have pokemon on our side. Of course the pokemon have to give their permission to enlist with their trainer or else the trainer can’t use them. It sorta makes sense since if that wasn’t a rule, pokemon would just be tools and that wouldn’t be right. It’s not like there’s been a war for many centuries anyways though, so all the guns being produced were just wasted money. Heck, most people and pokemon assigned to the military these days are assigned to police work and the occasional disaster zone.”

    “I see,” Rachel replied, taking in the information. “What about Kanto?”

    “Johto applied some pressure to them, so they’re coming around, actually. I read in the news they’re having a meeting about it later this week. If you ask me, they’ll be gun free by the end of the month,” Blane responded.

    Drezdk looked to Daedalus and Corphish. “<What is a gun?>”

    “<Something bad,>” the Taillow answered.

    “<Something awesome,>” Corphish retaliated, huffily. He looked between Drezdk and Daedalus. “<Have you not seen Die Hard, the best action movie in the history of the world? It stars Bruce, a Machoke? Subtitled? Ringing any bells?>”

    Drezdk and Daedalus both reacted to Corphish’s enthusiasm with blank stares. Corphish huffed and turned around. “<It looks like we’ll have to have a movie night sometime!>”

    Drezdk leaned over to the Taillow and whispered by cupping his mouth with his forestinger. “<Is he... okay?>” he asked, gesturing to Corphish with a nod of his head.

    Daedalus raised his wing and cupped his wing to his mouth as well. “<Quite the opposite...>”

    Atlas and Prometheus finally made it over to the terminal without being noticed and coiled themselves so that they would remain relatively hidden behind the small building.

    “<It took you all long enough,>” Prometheus said in a hushed voice.

    “Nice to see you too, Pro,” Kevin responded.

    “<We’re, uhh, glad you all came,>” Atlas said, casting a glance to Jeff before awkwardly looking away.

    “Yeah, what’s going on?” Jeff asked.

    “<There’s a bunch of humans in red over near the center of the volcano,>” Prometheus responded. “<Atlas wasn’t sure if we should show ourselves to them, so we stayed hidden.>”

    Atlas rolled his eyes. “<That was you, Prometheus.>”

    “<Ridiculous,>” the blue-eyed Onix insisted.

    Kevin turned to the others, actually passing up an opportunity to rib Prometheus. “Team Magma. I knew it,” he said fierily.

    “How many were there?” Blane asked.

    “<Nine,>” Prometheus replied. “<Eight of them looked alike but one of them had a different looking head and was much cleaner. Could he be the evolved form of the others?>”

    “<I told you this already, Prometheus,>” Atlas said. “<Humans don’t evolve. They’re like the Sableyes and Mawiles in Granite Cave before Cronus threw them out,>” he added bitterly.

    “<Right...>” Prometheus muttered. He turned to the others who were still standing inside the terminal. “<One other thing... When we first came up here, I heard one of them mention Lord Groudon’s name. Why would he do that?>”

    “Groudon?” Jeff asked. “I dunno... More importantly, why are they even up here at all?”

    “Yeah,” Rachel concurred. “Near the mouth of a volcano seems like a strange place for a team meeting.”

    The group thought about it for a few moments. It was then that Kevin’s eyes widened in horror. “I think I know what they’re doing...” he whispered, anger and fear in his voice.

    “<What is it, Kevin?>” Blitz asked, concerned by Kevin’s emotions.

    “What’s Team Magma’s goal?” he asked coldly.

    “To expand the world’s landmass,” Jeff responded. After a moment, he inhaled sharply. Several others also cued in at more or less the same time. “You don’t mean...?”

    Kevin nodded grimly. “They want Mount Chimney to erupt...”

    “<I knew it! I knew it! It’s going to erupt! I told you all! We’re going to die!>” Corphish exploded in a nearly hysterical panic. “<Whoever makes it out of here alive, tell Peeko I like her!>”

    “S-Settle down, Corphish,” Jeff said, nervousness in his voice as well. “We don’t know this for sure yet.”

    “Are you willing to take that chance?” Kevin retorted.

    “No... but what are we supposed to do? We can’t just attack them!>” Jeff said.

    “And why not? They’re Team Magma,” the blonde teen coldly said.

    “They outnumber us nine to four,” was Jeff’s response.

    “What about our pokemon?” Kevin rationalized.

    “What about theirs?” the dark haired teen retorted. “And I’m not about to send my pokemon to fight beside the mouth of a volcano, dormant or not.”

    Daedalus looked at Jeff with surprise. A flicker of respect could be seen behind the Taillow’s dark eyes, but he grimaced and averted his gaze.

    “<Let’s do this...>” he suggested, speaking up and drawing everybody’s attention. “<We’ll confront them peacefully and use fighting as a last resort. We’ll find out their true intentions and stop them if need be. Here’s the plan... Jeff and Kevin will go over there on Atlas and Prometheus’ backs. Even if they do have guns and they do use them, they’ll do next to nothing to the hide of an Onix. Treecko and Blitz will go with them to compensate for Atlas and Prometheus’ slow manoeuvrability. Everybody else will stay back here and watch. You four, try to avoid a fight if you can, but if you do get in trouble, we’ll be able to sweep around and attack them when they’re not expecting it.>”

    “Sounds like a good plan to me,” Blane spoke.

    “Is that okay with everybody?” Jeff asked, looking at the others. The response was nods all around.

    With that, Jeff nervously climbed on Atlas’s back, followed by Treecko. Prometheus gave Atlas a slight nod before looking forward. He felt Kevin crawl onto him. Blitz flew up and landed on Prometheus in a kneeling position.

    “<Let’s... go, I suppose,>” Prometheus said, uncoiling himself and beginning to slither out into the open.

    Atlas grimaced and looked back at his human companion with guilt. “<Jeff... I just wanted to say...>” he began.

    “We’ll talk later, Atlas, okay?” he replied, offering a small smile afterwards.

    Atlas sighed and nodded, following Prometheus. He moved out from behind the terminal. Jeff could finally see the rest of Mount Chimney’s peak. The summit was more or less completely flat with the exception of several crags and outcroppings jutting out of the rocky terrain.

    “<I’ve never seen rocks quite like this,>” Prometheus whispered to Atlas as they slithered across them.

    They looked forward and saw a massive sinkhole in the center of the plateau. It was there that the waves of heat rose from. Kevin tightened his grip on Prometheus’ back as they saw several humans facing towards the fissure. The eight nearly identical humans were garbed in the same uniform: black pants and red hooded sweaters that cut off at the biceps in a jagged pattern. The uniforms donned a large black ‘M’ printed on the front in the style of mountains: Team Magma’s logo.

    The ninth man there stood apart from the others. The first thing that one would notice about him was his neatly-styled, swept-back, red hair that parted in different directions at the nape of his neck. He wore a pristine pair of black pants and a primarily red topcoat with black lining. The coat was strange in that the top right corner of the coat was black and on the breast of it was a red Team Magma emblem. Even at a distance, the group could tell that he held himself with an air of confidence.

    “You think he’s the boss?” Jeff asked Kevin.

    “I think. He’s dressed the least ridiculously,” the blonde teen responded.

    One of the Team Magma members scratched the back of his neck and momentarily turned his head to the side. Something in the corner of his eye caught his attention and he decided to turn towards it. A pair of Onix were slithering towards him and he recoiled in wide-eyed horror.

    “AH! Where the hell did those Onix come from?!” he shouted, backing up into another member. The other seven grunts turned around and the suspected leader of the group looked towards them with an arched eyebrow.

    “The heck?!” another Team Magma member exclaimed. “Are they wild? I didn’t think they lived around these parts!”

    “<I think they finally noticed us,>” Prometheus muttered warily.

    “They’re not wild; there’s humans and pokemon riding on them!” a Team Magma member replied.

    “Should we take ‘em down, Sir?” another one called out.

    “No,” the leader spoke calmly, raising his hand to relax his subordinates. “At least... not yet.”

    He ran his fingers through his red hair and walked away from the volcano’s mouth, passing by the other members of Team Magma. He stepped out in front of them as Atlas and Prometheus grew near, folding his arms confidently.

    Treecko climbed up onto Atlas’ head, preparing to jump off should the need arise. Blitz was also ready to act at a moment’s notice. Kevin hopped off and walked forward, stepping in front of Atlas and Prometheus, causing them both to stop.

    “Team Magma!” Kevin shouted over to them.

    The leader smirked and nodded. “Very astute. You’re well versed in current affairs, I see.”

    “You’re not hard to recognize when you all wear such ridiculous uniforms,” Kevin replied in a mixture of taunting and anger.

    “You brat!” one of the members shouted. “My mom made me this hat!”

    The red-haired man raised a hand to silence him. He observed Kevin carefully. “...Why do you seem familiar?”

    Blitz walked up beside Kevin protectively. “Beats me. You’re Maxie, right?” the teen asked.

    Jeff walked over to Kevin and Blitz as well. “Don’t antagonize them, Kevin. We just want to find out what’s going on,” he whispered.

    “Correct,” Maxie responded. “As I’m sure you know, I’m the leader of Team Magma. Who might you be and what are you doing here?”

    “I’m Jeff and this is Kevin,” Jeff explained, attempting to be more diplomatic. “We’re trainers and--”

    “’Kevin’...” the leader of Team Magma mused with a certain familiarity to his voice. “What’s your last name?”

    “More importantly, what are you guys doing here?” Kevin demanded, dismissing the question.

    Maxie chuckled while reaching into his topcoat pocket and clutching something. “What we’re doing is of the utmost importance,” he replied confidently. “Along with our pokemon, we, Team Magma, are ushering Hoenn into a reformation.”

    “You nutjobs are trying to drain the oceans!” Kevin shot back.

    Maxie nodded. “That’s right, Kevin. With more land to live on, Hoenn would prosper. The blooming flora, the diverse pokemon... We would be able to build cities anew without impeding on pokemons’ territory.”

    “Yeah, that’s great,” Kevin muttered dismissively. “I don’t care about your grand scheme right now. What are you doing here?”

    “You’re the impatient one,” the Team Magma leader spoke, drawing something from his coat. Clutched is his palm was a nearly-purple stone that he brandished in front of him. The rock had an unnatural sparkle to it.

    “What’s that?” Jeff asked.

    Maxie grinned with a smug expression on his face. “This... this is the key to Hoenn’s golden age. This will unlock the glorious future.”

    “It’s a rock...” Kevin deadpanned.

    “Even something as small as a rock has the potential to do something monumental,” Maxie responded. “This rock in particular is from outer space. Just by looking at it you can tell that it possesses an otherworldly quality.”

    “What’s that for?” Jeff questioned.

    Maxie chuckled to himself. “With this meteorite, everything will change...” He looked at the trainers and their pokemon. “This has the ability to drain Mount Chimney and call upon the power within its core.”

    His sly smile widened. “Team Magma will awaken Groudon: god of the earth and the messenger of Team Magma’s ideals...”

    -----

    Author's Notes: I'm quoting elyvorg when I say "Kevin + Lemon = OTP" =P

    Read, review and hope you enjoyed it.
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    Ooh, yay! Let's give it up for revival!

    I'm so on this! ^_^

    ... so the journey continues, and we get an interesting look into the legislation and history of the Pokemon World. We also apparently get to see one of Kevin's anger switches in play. His dislike of Team Magma seems to run deeper than a dislike of their tactics. Makes you wonder...

    Watching Jeff's team mates interact was also highly entertaining. As usual, particularly Corphish. He seems to have a quip and and wit for every event and occasion. Also reading Atlas's and Prometheus's manner of addressing Groudon brings an interesting look towards a Pokemon's outlook on sovereignty and/or religion, a topic not usually poked at in fanfiction.

    Looks like your return has left more questions to be answered, particularly in the upcoming rumble with Magma and Team Jeff. Can't wait to see what comes next!

    L@er!
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