I'll be the one to start off the reviewing!
So, we've got a new person, somewhat on the mysterious side, but he seems nice enough. However, I can't shake the thought that he's up to no good. His aura is mysterious with sinister hints, and that worries me. I'm also kinda worried about that Milo, what if he turns against Carrie? Anyway, there are heaps of possibilities for you to take so I'll await the next chapter with impatience.
Personality of the Grovyles seemed to lack somewhat. I'm not saying it was bad, just could be a little more fleshed out. Previous chapter Foliano and Ivyx were fairly ignored and had no defining charasteristics, and now, while Ivyx was shown to be a rather thoughtful Grovyle, with hints of snobbishness, lucky she conceals those parts. You mentioned that yourself. Raptola was once more the little cutie, but I missed our cool Velotus here. Foliano also needs more defining characteristics.
Now, my review aside, here are the highlights:
This is a beautiful way to describe a human, done by a Grovyle x3 It was funny, and it really made clear how pokemon would think of a human, instead of a human of a pokemon.He was quite bulky for a human – though Ivyx saw all humans as bulky, this one was particularly so. She wasn’t a very good judge of human age, but he looked to be a few years older than her trainer. On his head was a ruffled brown patch of fur – no wait, what did they call that again? – hair. He was wearing clothes of varying shades of brown too, and was carrying on his back a large – very large, big enough to fit two Grovyle in with room to spare – beige rucksack.
Indeed a brilliant way Carrie *sarcasm*He had a point, like always. Carrie hadn’t really given it much thought. She guessed that she’d been subconsciously planning an introduction along the lines of “Hi, my name’s Carrie, tell me everything you know about the creature that just flew past”. This clearly was not the way to go now she was presented with a much more sensible option, she realised sheepishly.
Raptola, you damn little cutie x3She stood up. Before she knew what was happening, Raptola had bounded into his usual position on her back and was bouncing excitedly, squeaking something that approximated to “I wanna battle! I wanna battle! I wanna battle!”
*firmly grips the little baby*
****! I'm gonna space out my updates a little more so that a friend of mine can read the other chapters. This will probably mean that the next chapter may be in the period that you're away.I'd also like to mention that I'll be out of my country from Saturday 22nd September to Sunday 30th September, and as such I won't be able to write or review at all during that time, so the next chapter will take a while to be done.
Anyway, once more, keep up the great work