15th May 2011, 8:30 PM
So here's a curious question....why have you never posted this on fanfiction.net?
It's an amazing story that few authors can say they meet the same caliber, so why leave it here? I'm sure you must have your reasons, but still...
Anyways, great story, love the plot, setting, and the attention to character details. Don't really have anything that needs improvement, maybe a grammar error here and there but that's normal. I do like how you have the rich vs poor contrast and how you explain each of their perspectives the same way with different wording multiple times; I find that hard to do.
Anyways, hope you continue your return streak!
Christian and American.
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