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    AdvanceShipping: Through Time & Darkness (Advanceshipping mostly) Rated T

    Hello, this is Waterpokes.
    Some of you might remember me from the Advanceshipping thread, and after a while, I had this story in my head. And it had Advanceshipping! 8D
    So give me a review, and give me advice, since that will probably help me.
    So let's get started, shall we?


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    Chapter 1: Sweet Home Pallet Town

    Narrator: After a year in Orre, Ash comes back to Kanto. After his stay in Orre, and the defeat of the Pokemon Mafia, Ash has changed in many ways. Ash is now coming back to Pallet Town, but on the way, evil forces are lurking. While Ash has to fight his personal problems, a problem is soon going to hit the whole wide Pokemon World . . .

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    Vermillion City, the place where new trainers take their first step to the land called Kanto. But not only for new trainers, also veterans and one of them was Ash Ketchum. Even though Ash was only 16 years old, he even had some beard and his hear reached his shoulders. The clothes he wore through Sinnoh, was now dirty and his jacket had many scratches.

    "Ahh... the sweet scent of Kanto. I sure missed the smell!," the young trainer said to himself, as people walked out S.S.Anna.

    Suddenly, one of his Poke Balls activated and a dark blue-ish Pokemon came out.

    Heracross (I smell honey!). It was Heracross, the Pokemon Ash captured during Johto. Soon, all the other Poke Balls activated and out came Snorlax, his hungry giant, Muk, the "Proffesor hugger", Kingler, the pincher, Gabite, power hungry of the group, and the last one was Tauros, who was the leader of the other 29 Tauros' Ash had at Oak's ranch.

    Snorlax (Your not the only one... hungry...). Snorlax looked at Tauros, and his eyes went from normal eyes into steaks. Tauros quickly understood the situation and kicked Snorlax in the face with a good Double Kick. Snorlax got repeled back and fell over Kingler, who was sleeping. Soon, chaos was all over them and Ash recalled them all back. Ash could feel their frustration, as they had been with him a whole year in Orre. Ash began walking towards Diglett Cave, as that was the quickest way home.

    Diglett Cave, a cave full of Diglett's and Dugtrio's. It was dark as night and only the craziest would go into this cave. Ash walked through the cave and he took out his flashlight. As he walked deeper and deeper into the cave, he didn't see one Diglett or Dugtrio.

    Even though Ash had grown some beard, you couldn't see his facial expression. In the dark, it was hard to see, but with the beard, even harder to see. But behind the beard, that Ash didn't bother to cut, he had a big smile. He wanted to see his Pokemon, his friends, family and... her . . .
    While Ash was clouded by thoughts, a Diglett appeared from behind. He had a camera on his head and he followed Ash, through the mysterious Diglett Cave.

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    "Sir, do you think he will join us?," a man with much beard and sitting in a wheel chair said, while a man lurking in the shadows observed, through a video camera, where Ash would walk. The room was dark and only thing that shined was the video cameras.

    "Of course. We will soon get the control over the whole Pokemon world and with him on our team, nothing can defeat us," the man in the shadow spoke, with a very dark voice.

    "That depends, if the gym leaders really want to approve it. Some of them didn't like the suggestion, my lord," said the man in the wheel chair, and a maitres gave the two men some tea. The man sip some of his tea and he quickly burned himself.

    "They will, when the first attack, the civilians will think the Gym Leaders are weak," the shadow gave the guy in the wheel chair a video, and continued; "And then they will give after. If they refuse, the better for us."

    "But what about Ash Ketchum? The boy has fought Palkia & Dialga, and against Kyorgre & Ground! He has lots of guts!," the video the old man hold in his hand, was waving the video.

    "Every person has a weakness and I believe Ash Ketchum's will soon be shown," the man in the darkness said and began to drink some tea.

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    Ash took a seat on a bench outside the abandoned Viridian Gym. Ash remembered when he fought there. In a match against Team Rocket and against Elite Four member Agatha. After a while, while just sitting their, he wanted to take a look inside the gym, to see if anybody was inside. Then he heard something taking off. It was loud and Ash's face hit the glass. He could feel the pain and touched anywhere on the face to check if anything was broken.

    (Wow, take it is easy.) Ash could swear he heard that before and when he stopped rubbing his face and nose, he saw Pidgeot stand right beside him.

    "That was you! Why did you do that?," Ash became angry at his former bird Pokemon, who was almost ready to laugh.

    (All that beard is like covering your face. I thought your face couldn't see me, so that's why I did it.) Pidgeot flew up again because of Ash wanting to teach him a lesson. Ash didn't know what Pidgeot talked about, but it was probably his beard. He ran in circles, while Pidgeot was taunting him, on the top of the Gym.

    "Good thing to hear your that," Ash stopped running in circles after Pidgeot and looked at him.

    (I saw you in Vermillion, but I didn't want to you to see me. And my Pidgey group has decided to live somewhere else. I just wanted to tau-,) Pidgeot spoke, and while looking at Ash in one second and then somewhere else, Ash managed to jump on Pidgeot with one leap.

    "Okey, you asked for it. I've learned many new things back in Orre. And for some reason, I actually enjoyed the walk from Vermillion to Viridian," Ash said, mostly to himself, as Pidgeot began to fly towards Pallet Town. The bird realized that the battle was lost and he didn't want to get hurt.

    (Of course, that walk was a plot-device,) Ash didn't get a word what Pidgeot said, but Ash didn't mind. As they flew through the sky, like when Pidgeot battled Fearow, Ash got a flashback...

    *Flashback, Vermillion City*

    Ash and May were sitting on the bench, while Max were playing with some of the Pokemon, and saying good-bye. Ash looked at May, who were just playing with her ramen food. She didn't seem so hungry and Ash stopped eating.

    "Anything wrong May?," Ash still had some food in his mouth while talking.

    "Nothing at all," May spoke, as she got hit off-guard. She almost lost all her ramen. Ash became a little worried and touched her hand. Her hand began to shake as he touched her hand.

    "Why all the shaking, May?," Ash quickly gazed and she was not her usual self.

    "Oh nothing, just a little sad that we have to leave. That's all," May turned back to her happy attitude. As the boat arrived, May and Max said good-bye to Ash and Brock. All four of them were sad, but they were still friends and wished each other good luck. As the boat quickly became as small as a Weedle in the horisont, Ash thought about May. After some long thinking, while walking with Brock towards home, he realized that she was nervous, but he didn't know why . . . (A/N: Yeah, Ash didn't get it before then. And yes, he is that dense!)

    *Present*

    Somewhere in Hoenn, two men in armor. The armour was shinning and grey, and they carried two guns. Actually, it wasn't normal guns; it had Poke Ball's in the guns. It was a thick fog lurking over them, and they saw a trainer there. The trainer had a Vulpix, and it had a minor injury. He used some Potion to heal it and when he saw the two men in amour, he challenged them to a battle.

    Few seconds later, the trainer was defeated and he was shaking, like his soul and spirit disappeared. His Vulpix was grey as the trainer and it was like they disappeared from earth. The two men walked longer into the fog and they saw two shinning orbs. One was red and the other one was blue. Like a ninja, the two orbs, along with the men, were vanished and the battle had begun . . .

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    So how did you like this chapter?
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    HeeeeLLLLLOOOOO!!!
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    wow, just finish reading the chapter and it's really good!
    when it came to Ash, he was well described, and so in character! I wonder what's going on... hehe.. I like ash's Pokemon!! =D

    mm kay, you'll be seeing me around here! Great work!
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    Nice, can't wait for the main plot to be revealed.

    I cannot say much about this chapter as it is only the start, but one thing I will say is that it could be improved if had a bit more description; it doesn't have to be like a novel as this is a fanfic, but simple things like describing places, people and Pokemon. One or two minor typos but nothing major.

    Just one thing, what was this meant to say; 'Good thing to hear your that'.

    I am not being nasty, I am just giving you some feedback.

    It is nice that you managed to keep Ash in character, and that flashback to when Ash and May parted was cute.

    I think that this fic will turn out fine in the end.

    See Ya!

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    Thanks for the reviews, Satoshi<3 and Chaos Umbreon
    And I better start describing things better.
    Anyway, here is my second chapter:

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    Chapter 2: Beautiful You

    Ash slept, as the cold wind, blowing from the east, hit his face and the beard. Ash woke up, a top of Pidgeot. He finally saw Pallet Town, a town he hasn't seen in a long time. Pidgeot glided through the air and wind, and made it safely to ground. Ash stepped off and looked at Pidgeot. They were just outside Oak's lab.

    "Thank you Pidgeot, I hope we can see each other in the future." Ash said, while his hand touched Pidgeot feather's For every minute he touched Pidgeot, his hand grew warmer, even though the air made it cold.

    (Yeah, me too. Can I go now?) Pidgeot began flapping his wings again flew off. Ash saw his majestic Pokemon fly away, like a prince. Ash then began to think. Should he go home or to Oak? His mom would either hit him in the head with a pan, if somebody come in, or he could just sleep in one of Oak rooms. Ash didn't really want a pan in his face, so he walked towards Oak.

    Ash touched the handle and the door opened. His Pokemon must be sleeping somewhere, and he didn't really want to run into them. Ash walked on his toes, and then, suddenly, Ash got hit by a pan in the face.

    "This is what I don't even..." Ash rubbed his noes, after getting hit by the pan. Ash swore on his life, that he would find the person who made up a pan.

    "Is that you Ash?," a familiar voice was heard and Ash quickly recognize it. The lights got turned on and Ash saw Tracey over him. He was holding a frying pan and he was wearing a coat.

    "Tracey, did you learn that from my mom?" Ash stood up and looked at Tracey, as he continued to rub his damaged nose. Ash's eyes made a quick glance on Tracey, as he just glared at Ash. "Is everything ok-," Ash began speaking, but got squeezed by Tracey. Ash saw Tracey crying and Ash didn't know what to do, so he just clapped his back. A noise from above was going through their ears and they saw Oak appear.

    "Ash, is that you?," Oak's voice was just the same as always. Wise, old and pretty much rusty. Ash didn't know what to do with the crying Tracey, so he just looked at Oak. He ran down the stairs and Tracey stopped squeezing Ash.

    "Good to see you Proffesor," Ash took out his hand, but he did also get squeezed by Oak. Ash knew one thing, while he was gone for 1 year, and that was that Oak and Tracey had spent way much time with his mom.

    "Ash, I have so much to tell you! We must sit down in the kitchen. Tracey, make some tea for all three of us," Oak said, and Tracey hurried to the kitchen to make some tea. Oak let go of the hug and slowly moved towards the kitchen. Ash quickly followed Oak and Tracey to the kitchen, not knowing this wasn't a normal tea party.

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    Tracey was just finished serving Ash and Oak, in the blue kitchen. The moon shined right through the window and it was like it was watching them. Ash didn't like the look on Oak's face, as he was pretty serious. Ash was pretty sleepy after the long trip from Orre to Kanto. He could sleep any moment. Ash, with his sleepy eyes, just looked at Oak, after asking Oak five times, about what he was going to say.

    "Oak, can you ple-," Ash spoke again, but was interrupted by Oak, who made a speak.

    "First of all, I want to congratulate your work in Orre. The Pokemon Mafia will never resume and thanks to you, it's over. I know you want to rest, but I have one more quest for you," he said, and Ash's mouth fell like a ambolt. Another quest, right after this quest that lasted a year.

    "But I've alr-," Ash spoke again, but was once again interrupted by Oak. His anger was boiling now, and his fists began shaking and was ready to punch anything.

    "Do not interrupt me. This quest is much more dangerous. You need to collect two orbs, the Sun Orb and the Moon Orb," Oak said, and he gave Ash a picture of two gorgeous orbs. They really looked like the Sun and the Moon. "They have been stolen from Mt. Pyre, the former location for the Red Orb and Blue Orb," his voice was almost shaking and he spilt some tea. Ash looked at Tracey, who quickly stood up and went to get some paper.

    "Okey, they have been stolen, but why me? I'm sure the Police will get it before sun rise," while he said this, he wasn't so angry anymore. He understood why some thieves would steal two gorgeous orbs, but why set him on the case?

    "No. You are the only one who can do this. You have fought Kyorgre & Groudon, Dialga & Palkia and several other legendaries. They have fought you, and with you. Who else can do this?," Oak gazed and Ash was embarrassed after acting arrogant. Oak was his mentor, the father he didn't have and he had learned Ash much. He felt like the biggest asshole on earth right now.

    "Okey, but I need more information first. But when should I start?"

    "After your friends have visited you. And they are coming in 3 days." Oak said, now drinking up his tea.

    "Oh, how is my friends?" Ash said this and began to think about his friends. The friends he missed for over a year. Brock, Misty, Max, Dawn and... May. Ash remembered the last time he saw May. In Johto, where he watched May come 4th place. He was going to go back to Kanto, and then to Orre, and not hear from any of them in a year.

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    *Past, Olivine City*

    "You did great!" a blue haired coordinator said, as the breeze from the sea and the waves hit the boats, who was floating around. Her name was Dawn, from Twinleaf Town, Sinnoh.

    "I would never had won, if it haven't been for you guys. You cheered me on." May said, and she hugged Dawn. The boat was right next to them and it was soon time to go.

    "Stop being so humble! You did great!" Dawn said, and let go of the hug.

    "I agree with her. You must realise that you are a great coordinator now." a brown spiked man said. It was Brock, one of Ash most loyal friends. Traveling with him almost everywhere, and was aiming to be the best breeder in the world.

    "You make me so flattered." May blushed for all the compliments. Ash was standing right next to Brock. Brock saw May and Ash look at each other. Brock took Dawn's bag and dragged her to the boat. "Dawn, the love birds needs there private moment." Brock whispered into her ear and she let go of the hug. She used some time to realise what he meant, but she realised it, when she saw Ash and May look at the ground and not on each other. The two boats had smoke come out them. One boat went for Kanto and the other one went for Hoenn.

    "Ahh, I get it!" Dawn stood right beside May and Ash, who then looked at her. She blinked to both of them, and that made both of them feel even more embarrassed.

    "Ahm...," May saw Dawn get dragged to the boat by Brock, who were just sweat dropping. Ash didn't know what to say, after the embarrassing moment.

    "I guess this is good-bye." Ash took up his hand and was ready to shake May's hand. He didn't really want to make contact with her because his hand was shaking and sweating. Ash would be surprised if she pulled out her hand to shake his. In a blink, Ash got hugged by May, who put both of her arms around his neck. She cried, as his jacket became wet.

    "I...will...miss...you."

    "Why can't you come to Kanto with us?"

    "Well," She looked up and Ash saw her face have lots of tears. "The Contest season starts in Sinnoh soon, and my....," May couldn't say the sentence finished. Ash took his hands and took away her tears. Ash could now see her beautiful face. Ash didn't say anything, and May continued.

    "My rivals and I have decided to travel there now." May didn't cry anymore, and she didn't look at Ash anymore. Ash saw her rivals appear, on the other side of the dock.

    "Ohh..." Ash let go of the hug. Ash's heart fell like an ambolt, and he saw the three rivals May had. One was Harley, a freak in a Cacturne costume, Soledad, a tall and winner of the Johto and Kanto Grand Festival, and then Drew, a guy who were May's first rival, just like Gary was to Ash. Ash and Drew was some what alike. Both of them wanted to win, and they gave 100% all the time. But one thing Ash both had in common, the most common they had, was that both loved May. After his travels to Sinnoh, Ash realised something during the Wallace Cup, and that was that he loved May. Something he missed during Sinnoh, was her. Ash always thought May liked Drew. Ash didn't really care for love, but after a while, when May left, he began realising it. Ash thought that May loved Drew, as Dawn stated during the Grand Festival: "Wow, they really are the dynamic duo. Romeo and Juliet."

    "Are you sure you don't want to join us?" Ash spoke, as the boat he was going to take, was about to go.

    "I'm sorry Ash." May walked towards her rivals, and Ash's heart was almost broken into 1000 pieces. He now realised how Brock had it, and Ash would never forget it. Never.

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    *Present, Oak's lab*

    "Well, you're friends has been visiting the lab every day almost. As the season for Contests and Leagues hasn't begun yet, they visit this place almost too many times." Tracey spoke, and he took away Oak's tea cup.

    "Everyone?" Ash was a little shocked that his friends still remembered him.

    "Yes. Dawn, Max, Brock, Misty and May has visited this place many times. May is even sleeping here, right now." Oak spoke, like he just realised it.

    "She is?" Ash raised up from his chair. He was so close to May. He had never been so close since Johto.

    "Yes. She visited this place daily. 8AM to 9PM. When we said you weren't here, she just went out and played with your Pokemon. Your Pokemon really likes May. I think, three days ago, she came and visited again. She was exhausted and she collapsed at the front step. We carried her to one of the beds and she has been sleeping there for 3 days." Tracey gasped, and he was just as sleepy as Ash, when he said that.

    "So Ash, I figured out that you ar-," Oak said, but Ash was already gone. Ash ran up the stairs and he silently opened every door to see her. In the second last door, he saw his most trusted Pokemon sleeping. It was Pikachu. His best and most loyal friend. Ash felt guilty as he looked at Pikachu. Why he didn't take with him Pikachu to Orre. Pikachu was sleeping near somebody, and Ash saw her. It was May. Ash was stunned for some seconds, and he didn't know what to think. Ash wanted to touch her, but he closed the door. Ash walked to the next door and he saw a bed. He sat down, on the bed. Ash's mind was in another dimension. The stars flew over him, like a shooting star. Ash then heard a light knock and Ash looked at the door. Who could it be? Ash slowly opened the door and he saw...

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    This is so much better!

    The extra description slowed the pace of the story so it doesn't seem rushed, only in a few places it would have been better if it was worded slightly differently like when the same word is used too many times in the same sentence.

    Other than that much improved, liked how Tracey and Professor Oak have spent too much time with Ash's mom. Also that was an amazing Advanceshipping flash back.

    I wonder who is at the door. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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    Thank you Chaos Umbreon, I'll use longer time now and actually try it slower and in a slower pace. Thank you for the review. 8D

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    Chapter 3: She wants you back

    Ash couldn't believe his eyes. As the rusty door opened, he witnessed May. He saw her wearing a white nightgown. Her hair was down, and not right-down or left-down. Just strait down. But Ash didn't focus on her hair, or her nightgown, he focused in her face. Her face was just staring at Ash. He thought May could be sleep walking, but Ash couldn't be sure. He waved his hand in front of her, and faster then lightning, Ash got slapped in the face. (A/N: Yeah, I did make her slap him. Got any problem with that? 8D)

    "How could you do that?," May shouted to Ash, who realized this was not his day. First being hit in the face with a pan and now being slapped. This was clearly not his day.

    "What do you mean?," Ash didn't know what to say, so he figured out that playing dumb could help him. He stood up again and looked at May.

    "Don't play dumb! After leaving everybody, that's the best you could say?," she shouted and began attacking him, and began pounding his chest. Ash didn't feel anything at all, but May hadn't eaten in days and she was obivously tired. She kept pounding him, and after some seconds, May got tired and fell on the floor, crying. She glared, while crying, at Ash.

    "I'm sorry," Ash took out his hand and offered her his hand. He didn't care if she was going to bite, hit him or whatever way you can hurt a person. Unbelievably, she took his hand and as she stood up again, she was less then a meter from him. As she didn't say anything, Ash continued.

    "I'm sorry for not saying anything. I didn't want to worry any of you back here," Ash pumped his fists. Even though he stopped one of the most dangerous groups in Orre, he would rather be here with his friends.

    "You didn't call in Orre because you didn't want to worry us? When you're not calling us, we will get even more worried! We wanted to help you!," May said this with force and Ash thought she was going to slap again, but she didn't.

    "If I called you guys, you would come to Orre and then possibly die! Do you think I want any of you to die?," he said, and sat on a chair, and looked out of the window. He was mad and he just wanted to sleep.

    "I've been dying a little everyday, since the day in Olivine City, our last meeting," she whispered a little and she sat on the bed. Ash's emotions, how he was mad and just wanted to sleep, disappeared. She had been dying inside because of him?

    "I...didn't...know...that..." Ash said in a low voice, and looked around, to see May sleeping on the bed. The moon was shinning brighter then ever and the stars were shinning the room. Ash saw how beautiful May was. Ash took her in his arms and placed her on the bed, with the duvet over her. The blue duvet was now placed over her and Ash looked into her eyes. They were blue as crystal, and the blue eyes matched the bed. Ash walked out of the room;

    "I'm sorry May, for everything," he said it to himself, and he closed the door.

    "Thank...you...Ash...Ketchum..." May said this, and she finally went to sleep.

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    Ash could feel his back, being touched lightly. He was sleeping on the couch, and he could feel somebodys near him.

    "Is he dead?," a light voice spoke, probably a female's voice.

    "No clue," a light, but a little higher voice spoke, possibly a male's voice.

    "Stop picking on me," Ash said, and he knew who it was, when the screams erupted. Ash opened his eyes and saw Max and Dawn over him. In a split second, he was hugged, or in other words, attacked by them.

    "ASH!," both of them shouted and he figured out that he needed a surgery, to check if his ears was good. Then suddenly, an electric spark was heard. Dawn and Max let go of there hug and Ash could clearly see Pikachu. His best friend. Pikachu leaped on Ash and Pikachu gave multiple sparks. These were friendly sparks, and Ash was being electrocuted, but he didn't care. Seeing Dawn, Max and Pikachu was great.

    "You shouldn't hurt him that much," Brock said, standing by the door, out to the garden. Ash smiled as he saw Brock stand there. Brock was the same from there very first meeting. Been with him through most, through thick and thin. Beside Brock, stood Misty. She had gone with him through three regions and she was the first to feel Pikachu's chain reaction, of thundering and destroying bikes.

    "And what's that supposed to mean?," Ash said, and laughed.

    "Two words Ash; Your mom," Brock said it, and the main door opened, his mom came in. She stood by the door, and saw Ash, being surrounded by Pikachu, Dawn and Max. Ash was prepare for the worst, but Delia walked up to him and gave him a light hug. His friends almost oblivirated him, but his mom gave him a light hug?

    "Mom...is everything okey?," Ash spoke and he could see his mom crying. She didn't reply, but Ash could read her thoughts, as she, like his friends, were happy that he was back...

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    Ash walked outside, and saw the famous Oak garden. The flowers were sweet as perfume, plenty of oak trees and his most trusted Pokemon around him. Pikachu jumped on his shoulder and he shouted: Pika Pika!

    "Wow, you have a loud voice," Ash spoke.

    (Thank you!) Pikachu replied back and Ash only heard: Pi Pi Pi.

    The ground was shaking and Ash could see his 29 Tauros' run towards him. He would get major injuries if he got hit, but two of his four grass starters stopped them. It was Bulbasaur, one of the calmest Pokemon he had ever meet and Bayleaf, the Pokemon that had a major crush on him. They used their Vine Whip and managed to block them. Bayleaf and Bulbasaur smiled, as Ash saw them turn their heads towards him. Ash could see his three bird Pokemon fly over him, and swoop down. The wind was incredible and Ash saw Staraptor, Swellow and Noctowl have some sort of race.

    While Ash saw them fly, his six Poke Balls started and his six Pokemon came out. Gabite, Kingler, Snorlax, Heracross and Donphan. When they came out, he could see his Cyndaquil, Totodille and Corphish appear. His Pokemon greeted them, and Ash was happy that all his Pokemon was friendly. Suddenly, his Corphish pinched him in the butt and Ash screamed furiously. So much pain.

    "Corphish!" Ash screamed, as his Buizel, captured in Sinnoh, used his Water Gun to lower the pain his crab Pokemon caused him. Cyndaquil looked at Corphish, who didn't feel guilty at all.

    (What? I'm mad because he didn't take me to the Orre region.) Corphish said to Cyndaquil.

    (He had his reasons, so chill.) Cyndaquil replied back.

    (Me too. Some dancing could defiantly turn up the moral level.) Totodille went into conversation. The two other Pokemon looked at Totodille, and both thought Totodille's moral level was weak.

    Ash touched his butt, and it didn't hurt anymore. Ash thanked his Buizel and he saw Bulbasaur calm down Totodille and Corphish, who were in a conflict. In ended in a fight. It looked closely to a bar fight, like in Orre. He saw his massive Torterra help Bulbasaur split them up, but they didn't end the fight. Glalie, his floating skull Pokemon, froze both of them. Surprisingly, that didn't help either, as both them managed to crush the block they were in, and started arguing again.

    "Stop! Both of you!," Ash shouted, but his words was nothing compared to the arguing, which bought more and more Pokemon to the fight. Ash didn't know what to do, and he began separating his Pokemon, before anyone got hurt.

    "Is it a problem?," a voice spoke.

    "No, it's actually..." Ash spoke, as he tried to split up Totodille and Corphish, he saw May. She was much different. Ash looked at her clothes and they were so much different. She was in the same style as her once red top and her black mini-pants, but they were now blue. (A/N: Just like the Special, right?) Ash couldn't speak, as he looked at May. She walked past him, and everyone stood still. His Pokemon began to smell something really bad and they turned away from Ash, who smelled like crap. He hadn't taken a bath since his departure from Orre. Some of those who could, of his Pokemon, began waving their arms in front of their faces to get the smell away. May gave Totodille and Corphish some Poke-Poffin and both went to sleep.

    "Wow May...," Ash spoke, but he couldn't speak finish. She calmed all his Pokemon by just walking into the garden and she managed to put Totodille and Corphish to rest, while the rest of them couldn't. She walked up to Ash, and she leaned up to him. Ash became a little nervous, being so close to her.

    "Ash..." she spoke in a very low voice.

    "Whhhaattt?," Ash spoke, and with each word, he got more and more nervous.

    "You need to change your clothes," May said and she smiled happily to him. She took his dirty and dusty hand and dragged him inside. "Your mom, Dawn and Misty brought you new clothes," she spoke, as Ash saw his Pokemon laughing, as he was going to feel the power and mightiness of clothes.

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    Ash was sitting on a chair, in the laboratory, where Dawn and Misty had a fight. They were fighting over Ashs clothes, that he should wear. His old Sinnoh clothes, dirty and muddy, where now tossed in the garbage. Ash was scared, as Misty and Dawn were right over him, and arguing. Ash could see Max and Brock in the corner and laugh. They were holding their laughter and Ash swore on revenge.

    "The blue cap is better!," Misty shouted and put the blue cap on Ash's head.

    "No! The green cap suits him better!," Dawn spoke and removed the blue cap. "Right Ash?," Dawn spoke again and looked at Ash.

    "Ahm...," Ash said and he wished he could switch place with anyone right now.

    "Ash," a voice was heard and May appeared. Dawn and Misty saw up and looked at her. She began to whisper and the fighting stopped. Soon, all three of them began to look at Ash and all three of them began fixing him. Brock and Max didn't know what was going on, and after 1 minute, Ash was fixed. Oak, Delia and Tracey came in with the food, that Delia and Brock made for everyone.

    "Hey everyone!," Dawn shouted and everyone looked at her, with an odd face. "Look at Ash!," Dawn yelled so loud, that some of his Pokemon walked in. What could be embarrassing for Ash, having three girls dress him up, in front of his friends and Pokemon? It made him think of when he was little. His mom dressed him each day, until he became 9 years old.

    "Welcome, the new Ash!," Misty took Ash's hand and pulled him up. Ash was now in blue pants, black and red shoes, a red jacket, with short black sleeves, one black band on his left arm and a red one on his right arm. And his old cap was replaced with a red one, and had the half of a Poke Ball painted red on it. (A/N: Just to make sure everyone gets it, it's the outfit from Fire Red and Leaf Green.)

    "Now girls might start to like you," Dawn spoke and blinked to May. Ash didn't notice that, and May was blushing a little. Everyone sat down and Ash had never been so hungry in his entire life. And what could be better then eating his favorite food, made by his mom and Brock? Ash sat down and ate. Eating had never been that good.

    During the conversation, Ash found out that Max was going to head out for his first journey, and he was going to start his journey in Kanto. With him, Dawn and Brock was going to travel with him. Dawn, who revealed to him, that she had traveled in Johto after they left Sinnoh. Brock promised to Norman, May and Max's father, that he would watch out for Max during his journey. Dawn, who was the only girl of the group, asked Ash if he would like to join. Ash told them that he had a new task to do for Oak. Ash wanted to go with them, but he knew he would set them in danger if he did. Since Misty was the Gym Leader of Cerulean, it was no way she could join neither Ash nor the group. Dawn asked May, and May was a little confused. She finally answered Dawn, and she agreed to join.

    When the clock hit 9:00PM, Delia went home, with Max and Dawn. Max had Ash's room, so Ash had to sleep in Oak's lab. As the three of them went home, Misty was already in bed. Brock was helping cleaning up the dishes with Tracey. May was outside, with Ash's Pokemon. In the silent laboratory, Oak and Ash were sitting together.

    "Any thoughts Ash?," Oak spoke to the thinking Ash.

    "No, not really. I was just wondering about the mission," Ash replied.

    "Is it the mission it self or the parts?," Oak spoke.

    "What is that supposed to mean?," Ash replied and wondered what he meant.

    "Well, just the look at you, I think you mean the parts. It's a long shot, but does it concers your friends?," Oak said, to Ash, who saw his Pikachu jump into his arms.

    "Well, I thought about my friends. Can I have my friends with me?" Ash spoke.

    "How so? Dawn, Max and Brock are going on a journey, and that was planned a long time ago. Tracey will probably not leave, Misty are heading back to the Gym, and May' just agreed to join them." Oak said.

    "If they do go with me, is it a smart choice?," Ash said back to Oak.

    "It's a dangerous mission, and they can easily come in danger. Even though moral support and love from your closest can be the deciding factor to win and survive," Oak spoke and it was like he was reading a poem. "It's clearly up to you Ash." Oak continued.

    "Thank you, Proffesor. And one more thing before I go to bed, which Pokemon should I take with me?" Ash spoke again, and his Pikachu looked at him.

    (If you don't me with you, I'm gonna thunderbolt you!) Pikachu said.

    "Since this is region is Hoenn, maybe you should give your Sinnoh team a chance. You should defiantly not use the Pokemon you took with you. They need rest." Oak spoke, and walked towards his bedroom.

    "Proffesor, I know almost nothing about this mission." Ash spoke and his Pikachu was sitting on his cap.

    "You will know more. A trusting person is in Slateport, and he will give you all the information you need." Oak spoke and went to bed.

    Ash was left for himself and soon enough, he slowly went to sleep, as he walked towards the couch, with his Pikachu beside him. As Pikachu wasn't sleeping, and Pikachu could hear some noise outside. Pikachu walked from the couch and the sleeping Ash, and Pikachu bumped into May. May gave Pikachu the silent sign and Pikachu jumped into May's hands.

    (What's up?) Pikachu spoke.

    "Nothing Pikachu. Nothing." May placed Pikachu in the sleeping Ash's hands, and walked to the guest room.

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    9:27PM, Ash was standing outside the lab, with all his friends, Oak and his own mom watching him. Sitting on his cap, was Pikachu. Ash was also surrounded by his Sinnoh Pokemon. Torterra the "Continent Pokemon", Buizel the "Sea Weasel Pokemon", Staraptor the "Predator Pokemon" and Ambipom, the "Long Tail Pokemon".

    "Be sure to change your underwear!," Delia shouted, even though she stood less the 2 meters from him.

    "Mom, I think I know how to change my underwear," Ash spoke.

    "You needed three girls to help you change clothes," Brock interrupted him and he laughed a little.

    "And your 20 years old, and you still don't have a girl," Misty spoke, before Ash could defend himself.

    Brock began to cry. That comment had pierced through his heart and broke it. Ash laughed himself, and gave Brock a clap on the shoulder. Standing behind Oak and Delia, May was joyless that Ash had to leave. Dawn went to May.

    "You want to go with him, don't you?" Dawn said May.

    "I do want to with him, but I'm going with you now." May spoke and she tried not to sound depressed, but Dawn quickly saw through it.

    "If you want to join him, it's fine May." Dawn said.

    "Are you sure?" May looked at Dawn. Dawn was smiling, and May understood that she meant it.

    "I'm sure. I think Max wouldn't mind at all." Dawn said.

    "But the agreement we had..." May spoke, but got interrupted by Dawn.

    "It's okey, May." Dawn said and May quickly hug the Twinleaf girl. May and Dawn could see Ash with them now, as he had given advice to both Brock and Max, a hug to Misty and his mom.

    "So I guess this is good-bye?" Ash spoke and took out his hand to Dawn.

    "Maybe for me, but not for May. May wants to join you Ash!" Dawn yelled and pushed May into Ashs arms and both were in an awkward position. May leaped out his arms, before anyone of the others, who were saying good-bye to his Pokemon, could see it.

    "Is that true May?" Ash tried to remain calm, but he was so excited that May decided to join him.

    "Yes, it's true." May remarked and both looked at each other. Ash walked to his Pokemon, and recalled everyone, except Pikachu. May walked to his side and with their surprise, Max didn't scream, as Dawn said that May wouldn't be joining them. He was screaming in excitement, and Dawn pushed him inside and back to the labratory. The rest of them, except Oak, went inside.

    "Ash, you will find the person in Slateport. He will give you the right gadgets, and all the information," Oak spoke and May waved, as she walked down the road. Ash took a step towards the same direction, but Oak grabbed his hand and said, "Ash, be careful."

    "Don't worry professor, you know me." Ash spoke and gave the professor a handshake, and Ash caught up with May, who got Pikachu sit on her head. It was now a new journey, and it was just the two of them...

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    1000 meters over them, a giant airship was watching them. Several Pokemon was working on the open platform. Some Pokemon was even in chains and some Pokemon was using Flamethrower on them. Also in chains, was men and women. A man, lifting boxes, fell on his knees and a man, holding a spear, stomped on the mans face. One of the Pokemon in the chains, tried to defend the man. It was a Poliwag and then Poliwag was attacked with a Thunderbolt, by a Raichu. The man who had stomped on the man's face, quickly stepped aside, as the Raichu and a man, in a suit walked to the damaged man and the Poliwag. The man saw the man, and he was crying.

    In a quick session, the man in the suit ordered Raichu to Thunderbolt the man and Poliwag. Some of the guards watched and they could see the terror that was going on. The "Suit-guy" the took the tortured man and Poliwag and tossed them off the airship. The man and Poliwag was no more...

    ~~~

    And we are moving the plot.
    Hopefully you liked it and we can now move the plot.
    Hopefully some more people will review it. Critisism is something I need, to work with.
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    The story and your writing just keeps getting better.

    He waved his hand in front of her, and faster then lightning, Ash got slapped in the face.
    Ash got slapped again, I know it's common, but that is what May would do, so great job keeping May in character.

    "I've been dying a little everyday, since the day in Olivine City, our last meeting," she whispered a little and she sat on the bed.
    Poor May, and hence her breaking down in tears.

    Ash was prepare for the worst, but Delia walked up to him and gave him a light hug.
    What his mom didn't give him one of her famous 'Tyranitar Crushing' huggs, well I suppose she is sad and unable to at the time.

    "Is it the mission it self or the parts?," Oak spoke.

    "What is that supposed to mean?," Ash replied and wondered what he meant.

    "Well, just the look at you, I think you mean the parts. It's a long shot, but does it concers your friends?," Oak said, to Ash, who saw his Pikachu jump into his arms.
    Just one thing do you mean 'past', cause I do not quite understand.

    Nice touch having May wear Sappire's blue clothes, and she can instantly calm his Pokemon, that's unusual.

    "Ash..." she spoke in a very low voice.

    "Whhhaattt?," Ash spoke, and with each word, he got more and more nervous.

    "You need to change your clothes," May said and she smiled happily to him. She took his dirty and dusty hand and dragged him inside. "Your mom, Dawn and Misty brought you new clothes," she spoke, as Ash saw his Pokemon laughing, as he was going to feel the power and mightiness of clothes.
    Funny. May: "Ash, YOU STINK!"

    Yes, Ash and May get to travel alone, and more of the plot is revealed.

    Great, I look forward to the next chapter. I don't know why no one else is reviewing?

    See Ya!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Chaos_Umbreon View Post
    The story and your writing just keeps getting better.
    Thank you. Hopefully it will stay this way.

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    Ash got slapped again, I know it's common, but that is what May would do, so great job keeping May in character.
    Well, I have seen it gotten used often, but I thought it would make sense, for me to do it. I would know because I have experienced it myself.

    Quote Originally Posted by Chaos_Umbreon View Post

    What his mom didn't give him one of her famous 'Tyranitar Crushing' huggs, well I suppose she is sad and unable to at the time.
    I tried to make something different, right? I've seen, not only in Advanceshipping fics, but in many Ash fics, that this happen. Actually, I think you will get a clue why she didn't give him a 'Tyraniatar Crushing" hug.

    Quote Originally Posted by Chaos_Umbreon View Post

    Just one thing do you mean 'past', cause I do not quite understand.

    Nice touch having May wear Sappire's blue clothes, and she can instantly calm his Pokemon, that's unusual.
    Well, I did mean parts. I guess I picked the wrong words. I should rather have written: "Is it the mission or something indirectly to it?"

    Quote Originally Posted by Chaos_Umbreon View Post

    Yes, Ash and May get to travel alone, and more of the plot is revealed.

    Great, I look forward to the next chapter. I don't know why no one else is reviewing?

    See Ya!

    Chaos Out!
    Yes, more of the plot is going to be revealed. A new person is going to appear soon, and he is important. I would like to make some character experiments, but if I do that, I must replace some of the old.

    Hopefully some more people will review it. Of course, this section of the forum isn't the most crowded, but you never know. One day, I want to publish books, so this is a giant step for me.

    New chapter coming out soon.
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    I'm sooo sorry! I meant to review this earlier but I just had so many things to do!

    Well this chapter has to be my most fav! I really liked how May was acting particular. You just keep a lot of your characters in tune, and that's the strongest key you have! That and wonderful plotness!

    "Don't play dumb! After leaving everybody, that's the best you could say?," she shouted and began attacking him, and began pounding his chest. Ash didn't feel anything at all, but May hadn't eaten in days and she was obviously tired. She kept pounding him, and after some seconds, May got tired and fell on the floor, crying. She glared, while crying, at Ash
    Why am I so into these type of scenes?! I don't know it's like romantic and action at the same time! MOE!!!!!! anyways, this was my favorite part that goes into the beginning of the chapter.

    "I've been dying a little everyday, since the day in Olivine City, our last meeting," she whispered a little and she sat on the bed. Ash's emotions, how he was mad and just wanted to sleep, disappeared. She had been dying inside because of him?

    "I...didn't...know...that..." Ash said in a low voice, and looked around, to see May sleeping on the bed. The moon was shinning brighter then ever and the stars were shinning the room. Ash saw how beautiful May was. Ash took her in his arms and placed her on the bed, with the duvet over her. The blue duvet was now placed over her and Ash looked into her eyes. They were blue as crystal, and the blue eyes matched the bed. Ash walked out of the room;

    "I'm sorry May, for everything," he said it to himself, and he closed the door.

    "Thank...you...Ash...Ketchum..." May said this, and she finally went to sleep.
    KKKKKKKEEEYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!
    sooo advanceshipping in this part! I loved it, absolutely LOVED it!

    there are other parts that I loved but I don't want to take up a whole page =3
    I can't wait for the next chapter, and I'll be back! ( I promise this time! )
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