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    Chapter 9


    Dark and Stormy Night. Memories Resurface.


    “Where do I remember this place from…” Tristan thought as he gazed around into the green and empty haze for the third time. “Maybe it’s because… IT’S THE SAME STUPID DREAM!!!” By now Tristan was becoming very annoyed and aggrevated. He knew this dream was supposed to mean something, but he couldn’t figure out what. He already knew that he had to meet someone. Who though? That was what bothered him. He listened carefully. Soon a faint voice would be coming, and he wanted to hear as much as possible this time.

    “Nice to finally meet you, Tristan,” a cheerful came voice from behind.

    “WHAA!!!” Tristan jumped and spun around to see what spoke. He wasn’t expecting the voice to be so clear, and loud. It almost hurt. Standing in front of him was a tall and skinny Pokemon who appeared to be wearing a long white dress. She had a red crest protruding through her chest was shaped in a half of a heart.

    “Who are you!?” Tristan demanded, pointing up at her, “What are you doing in my dream!?”

    The new Pokemon answered, gazing at him through one of her deep red eyes. Her other eye was obstructed by her mid-length green hair. “My name is Gardevoir,” she said, giving a warm smile. “I’m here to tell you why you are here. The role you have in this wor-.”

    “Wait a minute,” Tristan cut in, putting out a hand, “You're that annoying voice from my other dreams aren’t you?”

    “Well…” Gardevoir said losing her smile, “I’ve been trying as hard as I could to contact you. Its hard to make a connection if I don’t know where you are.” She gazed down to where the ground would have been. “Did I really come across as annoying?”

    “Actually… forget it,” Tristan said, feeling a pang of guilt. His words hadn’t come out right. “I didn’t mean anything by it.” He paused a moment, then asked, “So, what’s with this role thing?”

    She looked up again, only to shake her head. “I’m sorry. But I can’t tell you that part yet. I must tell you when the time comes. But for now, there is something else you must do.”

    “Does it involve having to meet someone?”

    “Oh? How did you know already?” she asked, surprised.

    Tristan rolled his eyes. Apparently she hadn’t realized how clear she came across to him before. “Just a wild stab in the fog I guess.”

    “Well… yes, that is right,” she continued. “You need to meet with the human who saved the world three years ago. The one who called upon the power of Rayquaza to stop the falling star.”

    “The leader of Team Blue right? Yeah, I’ve heard about him. What’s the guy’s name anyway?” Tristan marveled at the fact that nobody had even told him the leader’s name yet.

    “His name? Yes, I can tell you his name,” she answered happily, “His name is–”

    BOOM!!!!!

    “WHAAA!!!” Tristan again jumped at another unexpected noise. He was awake now, though it was still the middle of the night. He looked out one of the windows, seeing the sky light up with a bright flash of lightning, followed by the low rumble of thunder. The rain was coming down in sheets, heavier than he’d ever seen. The wind was blowing hard against the team base and whistling through the trees. Cool air rushed into the room from the strong downdrafts high up in the storm.

    “Grrrrr,” he thought angrily, “Stupid storm! Just when that Gardevoir was about to tell me…” It wasn’t all bad though, now he at least knew who he had to meet.

    His thoughts were interrupted by loud bangs. It took a moment for him to realize that they were coming from the door. Who would be knocking so late at night? And in this storm, no less? He crossed the room, almost grabbing an apple from the table before remembering it wasn’t morning yet. As he began to open the door, the wind took hold of it, swinging it violently open. Now the person who knocked was in clear view.

    “Torchic!?” Tristan exclaimed.

    “Hey, Tristan… Sorry to bother you…” Torchic said weakly. She was completely drenched in water, which alarmed Tristan. Surely she hadn’t walked through this storm. “But the place I’m staying… Scorched Plains… couldn’t protect me from… from…” She sneezed to the side, and tried to shake off some more water. Tristan resisted a faint urge to chuckle. Her sneeze was barely a sniff. “Couldn’t protect me from this storm… can I stay here?”

    “Of course!” Tristan answered hastily, ushering her in, “This is your team base too, after all!” He struggled to shut the door behind him. Once he did, he turned back to his new guest. Observing her, he asked, “You didn’t come all the way through this storm, did you!?”

    She was shivering from head to toe, and looked rather ill. “Yep…” she answered weakly, “I… I…” She sneezed again. “I don’t feel so… so good...” She lost her balance and fell down on the floor, “I’ll just sleep here…”

    “Oh Torchic!” Tristan exclaimed at her sleeping body, “Why did you have to walk through the rain like that!?” Easily, he picked her up and set her down in the straw bed. Hopefully she would dry off and warm up. “She could use an Oran Berry…” he thought with another glance over her. With this, he made his way to the toolbox near the door. But as he reached in, he couldn’t find any berries. He’d forgotten that Totodile had eaten them all in Uproar Forest. If he wanted one, he’d have to make a trip to the Pokemon Village. But the storm was still very strong. It wouldn’t be a simple stroll.

    He didn’t even have to debate about this, though, before he decided what to do. He moved to the door, bringing the toolbox to bring with him. Before he could open the door though, more loud bangs came from behind it. “Who this time!?” he thought opening the door.

    This time it was Totodile. A bolt of lighting struck nearby followed by the roar of thunder. Totodile yelped as he dived into the base covering his head with his hands. Tristan struggled to close the door again before turning back to his second guest that night. “What brings you here?”

    “It’s Rub-A-Dub River!” exclaimed Totodile standing up to face Tristan. “The water level is too high and too fast, it almost swept me away!” A flash of lightning lit the window again, causing him to jump. “I… I also hate lightning…”

    “Well,” Tristan said pointing towards Torchic. “Now the whole team’s here.”

    “Torchic, too!?”

    “Yep. She came the same reason you did.”

    “She doesn’t look so good. I hope she didn’t walk in this storm.”

    “She did,” Tristan assured him, “I was just on my way to Kangaskan’s Storage to get her an Oran Berry. Wanna come?”

    “What!? Out in the storm!? In… in the LIGHTNING!?” Totodile asked, panicking, “Wh… wh… why not use the berries in the toolbox!? Is something wrong with them?”

    “You ate them all.”

    “Oh… yeah…” Totodile said, remembering his poor performance on their last mission. “I… I’m sorry about that…”

    “Well it’s okay. I’m going now though. You can stay here if you want.” Tristan began to head for the door, but stopped when he heard a strange sound. Totodile was facing the other way. “Totodile? Is… something wrong?”

    “Hey Tristan?”

    “Yeah? What’s up?”

    He turned to Tristan. There was something about his expression that wasn’t right. “Do you … do you think… I… deserve to be on this team?”

    Tristan gave a confused look. “What are you talking about?” This wasn’t like Totodile at all.

    Totodile looked down to the ground once more. “I realized this on our last mission. Oh… I couldn’t do anything right! I did nothing good on our mission! I was useless…”

    Tristan shook his head in disagreement. “That’s not tru–”

    “STOP!!” Totodile shouted suddenly, surprising even himself. He lowered his voice again and continued, “Just… stop. I… I know you’re just trying to make me feel better. You know I’m right though. After all…” He pointed at the toolbox Tristan was still holding. “Who wants someone who hogs all the berries to himself. And… and who wants someone who is so stupid that they forget to pack the water?” His eyes were beginning to become moist, his speech beginning to tremble slightly. “Who passes out in the middle of a battle? Who… who lets their client just… walk off!? And… who misses out on the final battle!? What single thing good have I done for this team Tristan!?” He rubbed his eyes, preventing a tear from forming. It couldn’t have been just the mission that caused him to break down like this, it must have been something more. “I just… drag the team back… Oh I was so stupid to try to start one! Who was I kidding!? How did I think I could save them!? They meant everything to me! I just wanted to make them prou-!”

    “TOTODILE!!” Tristan snapped. Totodile jumped again, not from the boom of thunder, but from the boom of Tristan’s voice. “What the heck has gotten into you!? Get a hold of yourself!”

    “But I-”

    “But what!?” Tristan interrupted, “Do you even hear what you’re saying! What on earth would cause you to think you’re useless!?”

    “Well I… Because I-”

    “Who is the one who always tries to keep the team’s spirits up!? The one who is always optimistic!?”

    “… me?” Totodile answered, heavy with doubt, “But that doesn’t mean anyth-”

    “Who is the one who came up with those great strategies in Silent Chasm when we fought Beedrill!?”

    “I… I did,” he answered more confidently. Blazing-vapour-bone was his idea after all. “It still doesn-”

    “Who was the one who worked so hard, even to the point of passing out!? That sounds like someone who’s pretty dedicated!”

    “I… I worked that hard?”

    “Who was the only one who believed me when no one else did!?”

    “T… Torchic and I.”

    “Don’t you see!?” Tristan ploughed on; “You’ve done a lot of work on this team! Is it your fault you’re a water Pokemon!? No! It's not your fault you struggled back in Uproar Forest! Is it your fault we forgot water!? No! Nobody expected that it would be as dry as a desert there! Is it your fault that all the berries were been eaten!? No! You ate them in order to stay to last as long as possible, which was long enough to really help out in that monster house! Still think you’re useless!?”

    “Tristan… I… I…” Totodile said wiping another tear from his eye, “I don’t know what to say…”

    Tristan lowered his voice, turning back to the door. “You don’t need to say anything. Now, I’m off to get that Oran Berry. Coming?”

    “Yeah…” Totodile said getting to his feet to follow Tristan’s lead, “Yeah! I’ll come! Thanks Tristan!”

    “It was nothing,” answered Tristan, barely tapping the door handle before it flung open. It looked less vicious from the inside than the outside. Reluctantly, they both stepped out, heading towards the village after working together to close the door again. He turned to Totodile, trying to speak over the howling wind. “I don’t want to hear you ever say something like that again! Okay!?”

    “Sure thing!”

    The rain fell as hard as ever, feeling like sharp little daggers against Tristan’s skin. Lightning lit the clouds every few seconds, accompanied by the ever-constant low rumbles of thunder. Totodile didn’t show it, but Tristan could tell that he was extremely nervous. At any moment he could be struck down instantly. The wind, though, had eased off, making it at least a little easier to run. As they were crossing the bridge to enter the Pokemon Village, Totodile stopped to look over the rail.

    “Look at the river,” he commented, eyes wide with wonder, and worry, “I’ve never seen it like this.”

    Tristan looked too. It wasn’t the calm river he saw a few days ago. The runoff from the hills caused it to become as turbulent as rapids, and way above its usual level. Inches beneath the deck, brownish water sloshed and churned, threatening to wash the entire bridge away. Tristan couldn’t explain it, but looking over the bridge made him extremely anxious. He partly blamed his earthy nature, but it was also as if he was being reminded of a past experience as well, though he had no idea what. All that mattered, though, was getting off the bridge as quickly as possible.

    “You alright?” Totodile called after getting off the bridge.

    Tristan nodded. “Don’t mind me!” he called back, “It’s nothing!”

    A few minutes later, they had arrived at Kangaskan’s Storage. It took a minute to wake her up but eventually she was ready for service. “Dears?” she asked rubbing her eyes sleepily, “What are you doing up so late? And in this storm?”

    “We need some Oran berries,” Totodile answered, “Torchic is sick.”

    “Well… It's after hours, but for you, I think I’ll make an exception. Just give me a moment.” She disappeared back into her storehouse, but soon after returned with the requested items. “Here you go, best wishes to Torchic, okay dears?”

    “You bet!” answered Totodile.

    “Thanks,” Tristan added.

    “Anytime dears,” she said cheerfully, “Except maybe not so late next time, alright?”

    “Alright,” Totodile replied as they began to head back to their team base.

    The storm went on with renewed fury, and by the time they’d reached the bridge again; Tristan’s eyes met a troubling site. To his dread, the river level had risen further, and now the deck of the bridge lay beneath an inch of the rapid water. It creaked and groaned under the stress as water pushed passed it.

    Totodile didn’t seem to notice, and just walked right out into the middle of the bridge. “Tristan?” he asked turning back. Tristan hadn’t even set foot on the bridge. “Come on. I wanna get out of this storm.”

    Tristan wanted to move, but his legs would simply refuse to do anything. What was going on? Why was he feeling this way? Was it because he feared being pushed off the bridge?

    “It’s just a bitta water!” Totodile called. Now at the other side other side of the bridge.

    “Easy for you to say!” Tristan snapped back. He turned his attention back to the bridge. Now there were two inches of water, and still rising. If he waited any longer it might be all but impossible to cross. He plucked up his courage and took his first step. The water was cold to the touch and accompanied by the pounding rain Tristan felt he too might need an Oran Berry. He took a couple more steps, trying to hold onto the flimsy railing for support. With every step he drew closer and closer to the middle of the bridge, where the water was fastest. With every step the water pushed harder and harder against him. The bridge continued to groan under his feet, and even began to sag under his added weight. The water was already up to his knees, and still rising! The railing he was clinging to bent further and further towards him forcing him to let go of the only support he had! He’d never felt so scared before in his life. But he didn’t want to admit it.

    “You’re doing great!” Totodile cheered form the other side of the bridge, “Only halfway left! You can do it!” He jumped slightly as another bolt of lightning struck somewhere in the forest.

    Tristan checked his progress. Indeed, he was halfway, though he felt he should have been all the way by now. It was only a few minutes ago that the fifteen-foot bridge seemed like just a hop, step and a jump. But now it might have well have been a hundred feet. He felt he would be swept away, and into the raging river. “I… I… I can’t!!” Tristan shouted back.

    “What!?”

    “I… I can’t make it!!”

    “Sure you can!! Just take a couple more steps! Then it’s all calm water from there!”

    The bridge suddenly lurched to the side, causing Tristan to stumble, barely holding on! It groaned and creaked louder than ever, sounds of wet snapping wood came from below. Would the bridge actually fall apart? Hesitantly, he raised his foot to take another step. Or, at least he tried to. Of all the times! Why now!? Suddenly he was struck by a powerful blast of wind. He lost his balance, looking up to the sky as the current swept him off his feet! High above him was a blurred figure in the shape of an enormous bird, with a blue shimmering trail behind it. Then he was in the water.

    From his lips he cried a word he’d been trying to repress. “HELP!!!”

    “TRISTAN!!!” he heard Totodile's voice scream, “TRISTAN!!! NO!!!”

    ***

    “Oh man… am I dead yet?” Tristan opened his eyes, and shivered slightly. Suddenly he jumped to his feet, recalling the events that night. He was back in the base, in the straw bed. Torchic and Totodile were talking a slight distance from him.

    Totodile turned his attention to Tristan, giving a relieved sigh. “Now that was thrilling.”

    “How are you feeling?” Torchic asked.

    “Better. You?”

    “Oh I feel great now. As soon as this storm ends I’ll be good enough to head back to my place.”

    “That’s good,” Tristan answered, satisfied. It was clear that she’d taken the Oran Berry. He too felt the sweet aftertaste of on Oran Berry in his own mouth. He gazed over at Totodile; “You saved me?”

    “Yep,” he answered proudly, “You sunk like a rock, you know that?”

    Tristan couldn’t help but let out a chuckle. “Yet another reason why you’re not useless.”

    “Yeah, you’re right!” Totodile answered happily.

    Torchic looked between them, confused, “Did I… miss something?”

    “I’ll explain later,” Totodile answered hastily, “Hey look, the storm’s eased off. We can probably head back now.”

    The sound of pounding rain had eased off, replaced by the faint taps of drizzle. Looking out the window, Tristan could see the moon in the sky with clouds retreating to the west. The storm had finally passed. With no further to do Tristan, Torchic and Totodile walked to the entrance, saying their good-byes. If Uproar hadn’t made them tired, then this storm certainly did.

    “Hold on!” Tristan spoke out just before his two friends left. “There’s something I’ve been meaning to ask you!”

    “Ask away,” Torchic answered.

    “The leader of Team Blue. What’s his name?”

    “Hang on,” Totodile said, surprised with himself; “we haven’t told you his name yet?”

    “Nope.”

    “I thought for sure we did,” Totodile continued.

    “Well, sure we can tell you,” Torchic answered happily, “His name is Dave.”

    “Dave?” Tristan repeated.

    “Yep,” Totodile said, “That’s him.”

    Instantly, Tristan felt as if a part of his human memory had just been shoved back into his brain. Dave... Dave had been a friend of his from the human world... He also had the memory of being lonely. Dave was his only best friend, and… Dave had disappeared just over three years ago. That was all Tristan could remember, that Dave, the only person who Tristan got a chance to get to know, the only person he could actually call a best friend as a human was here, in the Pokemon world, all this time. After so many years, he would finally be able to meet his old friend once more.

    “You know what,” Tristan started to say, Torchic and Totodile giving him curious looks. “I… I think I do remember something from when I was a human after all.”

    To be continued…
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    It may be a little early this time. However I have a bit of catching up to do. Anyway, hope you enjoy it, and thanks to those who posted for my previous chapter.


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    hmmm the thing about the quitting the team... that sounds like me in my worst moods :P
    an emo version i think sorry i'm just thinking awkwardly XD

    I liked the fact that totadile keeps freaking out over lightning :P and cubone doesn't mind lightning :P (cause i'm a ground type lol)

    couldn't find a favorite phrase maybe i'll find one

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    Very very ver yvery very very very very VERY

    Good. XD

    I particularly enjoy how Tristan can be a bit sarcastic at times.....or maybe I'm just enjoying this fanfic 'cuz I also happen to have a PMD charrie...who's a cubone.....>_>

    Zora: Geez, no need to adress me by my freaking NAME. -_-;;
    Ella the Cherrim (second in command to Zora) : Calm down, Zora....
    Patch the Pachirisu (third in command) : APPLESAUCE!!
    Zora: Now's not the time, Patch...T_T
    Patch: Time! Dime! Lime! Shime! Shicklebeetooprathertime!
    Zora: O_o Ooooooo-kay.... *backs away* ...
    Yes, I am sarcastic. No, I am not some emo goth-type cutter person. Yes, that is a muffin on my shoulder. And yes, I am VERY MUCH an ETERNAL POKEMON FREAK!! ...so get that in yer head, and all will be good.

    Who else can take down an angry legendary, all while maintaining a sense of cynicality?"PMD: Song of Rage," coming soon to an SPPF near you.

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    Wow. o-o Nice. As usual. But, like the hyper, off-topic telepathic critter I am, I couldn't help but notice one trivial little detail:

    In the Nsider version, didn't Tristan slap Totodile's face and yell, "Get ahold of yourself, Totodile!" ?

    But. That's just me. XD

    I loved that chapter! And am eagerly anticipating the next one....

    Absol: 'Course you are. You love just about any fanfic you read, you big goofy fur-brain.
    Me: Oh, hush. T_T
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    Quote Originally Posted by Koridojo_Blaziken View Post
    Wow. o-o Nice. As usual. But, like the hyper, off-topic blazichicken I am, I couldn't help but notice one trivial little detail:

    In the Nsider version, didn't Tristan slap Totodile's face and yell, "Get ahold of yourself, Totodile!" ?

    But. That's just me. XD

    I loved that chapter! And am eagerly anticipating the next one....

    Absol: 'Course you are. You love just about any fanfic you read, you big goofy chicken.
    Me: Oh, hush. T_T
    Yes you are correct. But remember that in the original version Totodile was also crying his eyes out. I thought his original speech was a little over the top. Me trying to force in too much drama. In trying to add too much drama the exact opposite happened, making it seem less realistic. (Not realistic as in boring, but realistic as in believable). So I toned it down a bit.

    With Totodile a little calmer than before I didn't see the need for Tristan to wack him back to his senses. I always thought it didn't fit with Tristan's character anyway. Yelling I thought was good enough.

    And there you have it =).


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    Oohhhh.. '3' me gets it now. (And, so this doesn't end up classified as spam....)

    [quote]“Oh man… am I dead yet?” Tristan opened his eyes, and shivered slightly. Suddenly he jumped to his feet, recalling the events that night. He was back in the base, in the straw bed. Torchic and Totodile were talking a slight distance from him.[/quoteblock]

    Somehow, I'd think that even with an Oran Berry, one wouldn't be able to leap up after nearly drowning....maybe more like:

    Suddenly he pushed himself into a sitting position, recalling the events that night.

    Just an observation. ^^;


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    true but from the game and tv special the pokemon perked up real quick
    in game it restores 100hp (though it only restores 10hp in the S/G/C and up games)
    but yeah it would sound more realistic if it didn't have that much of a powerful restorative effect (yes i'm actually using big words :P)

    i do love big ordeals that seem to take forever to go by when moments that are very, very rare and not able to replicate an event seems to fly by...

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    To Slipomatic:

    Wow. I really have no idea what you said there...=3


    And sorry I haven't been on for a while, but I had a cold. Didn't wanna risk sneezing and blowing the pages away......-_-U

    Anyways.

    I like that chappie a lot. You've definitely improved grammar, spelling and logic-wise. My current rating of this fanfic is....9.8/10, for the occasional little 'blip'. (Wait, wouldn't spelling count for grammar??? lol)
    Cute....but PSYCHO!!! XD Things even out.
    Iega Flyga Fleega Flyga Ishca Nishca Nyga Nyga Iega Flyga Fleega Flyga Biiiiiirdie. ^^
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    do you remember the moments where time seems to stand still? its hard for words to describe the event i'm trying to describe here >_<
    you know in some tv shows (cartoons included)/ flash videos/ some youtube videos, the slow parts where they play some song and the character is in slow motion doing something, it lasts a few minutes which in fact only happened for a couple of seconds.

    if this doesn't clarify only word of suggestion is to experience it. sorry for going off subject but i had to try explain as best as i could

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    Sorry about the delay... haven't been doing well lately.

    Anyway, nice chapter for CD. Description was pretty good, and length was pretty good too. I have to admit, I saw the Dave thing coming, but oh well. Nothing you can do about that. I'm just psychic.

    And now I have to go... time's running up for me to be on the computer. Auf Wiedersein.

    P.S. The "Dragon" Skin for Serebii looks cool... look at the Dragonite heads...

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    As you can see, I have been pretty busy lately. I'm afraid this trend will continue until the end of January. After that I will be posting chapters regularly again. The next chapter is pretty short, so I might be able to get it up this weakened. But if not then I hope you'll understand.

    [QUOTE=Koridojo_Blaziken;7403327]
    “Oh man… am I dead yet?” Tristan opened his eyes, and shivered slightly. Suddenly he jumped to his feet, recalling the events that night. He was back in the base, in the straw bed. Torchic and Totodile were talking a slight distance from him.[/quoteblock]

    Somehow, I'd think that even with an Oran Berry, one wouldn't be able to leap up after nearly drowning....maybe more like:

    Suddenly he pushed himself into a sitting position, recalling the events that night.

    Just an observation. ^^;
    I see what you mean. I'll see what I can do about that.

    Quote Originally Posted by ~*lopunny_diva*~ View Post
    I like that chappie a lot. You've definitely improved grammar, spelling and logic-wise. My current rating of this fanfic is....9.8/10, for the occasional little 'blip'. (Wait, wouldn't spelling count for grammar??? lol)
    Thanks. I believe spelling is a category of its own, but I could be wrong. Anyway, 98%! Yeah!!

    Quote Originally Posted by Slipomatic View Post
    do you remember the moments where time seems to stand still? its hard for words to describe the event i'm trying to describe here >_<
    you know in some tv shows (cartoons included)/ flash videos/ some youtube videos, the slow parts where they play some song and the character is in slow motion doing something, it lasts a few minutes which in fact only happened for a couple of seconds.

    if this doesn't clarify only word of suggestion is to experience it. sorry for going off subject but i had to try explain as best as i could
    I see. So you mean the part where Tristan becomes concious of every single second, making them seem much longer than they should be? Well that's good, cause that's what I was going for. Thanks for mentioning it.

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    Sorry about the delay... haven't been doing well lately.

    Anyway, nice chapter for CD. Description was pretty good, and length was pretty good too. I have to admit, I saw the Dave thing coming, but oh well. Nothing you can do about that. I'm just psychic.
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    yeah... i seem to guess some things without noticing :P i guess i should have more absentmindness in my stuff :P

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    You think THAT'S absentminded?? Pfffft. Back at Pokemon Crater I started a fanfic involving a trainer and a shiny Charmander......then I completely forgot that I started it in the first place. xD


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    lol i forget stuff without even have to try, i remember only when it was memorable or rather interesting :P or a video game >_< but yeah we're going off subject :P

    lets see if i can analyze a bit of the characters...

    Tristan - a little bit in the quiet side, talks when necessary, is modest, doesn't stand for bullying, doesn't have a funny bone (get my drift? :P), is serious with whatever is at task, a little absentminded :P, somewhat optimistic

    Totadile - spirited, mood swinger, talkative, sticks out as much as he can bear, a little bit of a trash talker, likes to brag a little, knowledgable about some things, has a serious side but is not often in that state of mind.

    Torchic - Straight down with business, mindful of conditions, a little bit bossy, talks a little rash honest however, gets angry rather easily, focus is a little narrow minded, a little touch of pessimistic side

    but then again i'm just analyzing just on from what i've read but don't take my word seriously :P its just what i think of what their behavior is

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    Quote Originally Posted by Slipomatic View Post
    lol i forget stuff without even have to try, i remember only when it was memorable or rather interesting :P or a video game >_< but yeah we're going off subject :P

    lets see if i can analyze a bit of the characters...

    Tristan - a little bit in the quiet side, talks when necessary, is modest, doesn't stand for bullying, doesn't have a funny bone (get my drift? :P), is serious with whatever is at task, a little absentminded :P, somewhat optimistic
    Nailed it! Very good analyzing. Only thing I'd add is that he cherishes his friends given that he has a history lacking them.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slipomatic View Post
    Totadile - spirited, mood swinger, talkative, sticks out as much as he can bear, a little bit of a trash talker, likes to brag a little, knowledgable about some things, has a serious side but is not often in that state of mind.
    Again, very close to how I wanted Totodile to come across to people. Though I'm not sure what you mean of trash talker.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slipomatic View Post
    Torchic - Straight down with business, mindful of conditions, a little bit bossy, talks a little rash honest however, gets angry rather easily, focus is a little narrow minded, a little touch of pessimistic side
    You're on a roll now! After a while you'll find out a little more about Torchic, but this all I want people to know about her now.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slipomatic View Post
    but then again i'm just analyzing just on from what i've read but don't take my word seriously :P its just what i think of what their behavior is
    Well I thank you for doing this. Reading this little analysis I get a chance to see how well I'm coming across to my readers. If these are the impressions you got then I'm guessing that others are generally feeling the same, in which case I'm right on track.

    Thanks again!


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    Note: Like I said, this is one of my shorter chapters in the story. I believe its actually the shortest chapter out of all the ones I've compiled so far. Nonetheless please enjoy!

    Chapter 10


    Following in the Footsteps of Idols. Team Charge-Net Takes Off!


    It was a calm morning in Thunder Meadows. Dewdrops clung to the yellow grass, which blanketed the still waterlogged soil. Despite having been several days since the massive storm, the effects of it could still be seen. Puddles lay scattered among grass of the fields.

    During that night it had been especially bad here. With only a few dead and bare trees to block it, the wind blew untamed. The lightning was constant, though it wasn’t of much concern, since all the inhabitants were electric type Pokemon. The rain wasn’t much of a problem either; draining off the cliff that bordered one side of the meadow. On a good day, like today, one could see all the way to the Pokemon Village from the edge of this cliff.

    A faint flapping sound drifted through the crisp air, signifying that Pelliper was taking his usual morning route. He touched down, dropping the newspaper in a rather short mailbox in front of one particular house. This house was shaped like a dome that featured a blue minus sign above the door. Grass was growing at the top, just above the minus sign, as well as above the single window. However, this house was so small that not even a Charizard could have fit comfortably in it. Pelliper flipped up the sign on the mailbox, which made a small squeaking noise, spread his wings and took off on his way to the next house.

    Not a moment later, the door to the small house swung open, revealing a small electric mouse with blue minus signs on his cheeks, blue on the tips of his ears as well as a blue minus sign for a tail. Most Pokemon at this time would have been groggy and would have done anything to go back to bed, but not this one. Feeling fresh and alert, Minun dashed out the door and made an all out sprint to the mailbox, coming to a sudden halt when he reached it. Reaching inside, he pulled out the recent edition of the Pelliper news. He’d been doing this for a little while now, searching for one name in particular. Unfortunately, this name had yet to turn up.

    He scanned through the paper, glancing at each heading as he went. “NEW CHAMPION AT MAKUHITA DOJO” “OUTDATED BRIDGE FINALLY REPLACED” “ANOTHER AMAZING RESCUE BY TEAM ACT” Eventually, one particular section caught his eye. With a burst of excitement he ran up to the house neighboring his own. It was similar in every way, with a red plus sign above the door instead of a blue minus sign. He knocked quickly on it, shouting, “Plusle! Hey Plusle! Come check this out!”

    The door opened and a small electric with red plus signs on his cheeks, red ears, and a red plus sign tail stepped out. Plusle had apparently just woken up, but brightened up right away upon seeing his friend and the paper in his hand. “Oh!” Plusle said excitedly, “You found what you were looking for!?”

    “Sure did!” answered Minun with equal excitement, “You know Team Supernova, right?”

    “… Yeah!” Plusle said thinking back, “I think so. That’s the team that Cubone is on right? The one that saved you? And then the two other members… I forgot who they were.”

    “Take a look at this!” Minun said showing Plusle the paper, “It’s a list of all the rescue teams that have ranked up today.” He pointed at one part of the list revealing the name Team Supernova; “They ranked up to bronze!”

    “Bronze,” Plusle repeated, impressed, “Not bad!”

    “I know!”

    “I know!!”

    “I know!!!”

    “I know!!!!”

    They both laughed between themselves for a couple moments; a passing Flaaffy gave them both an odd look before continuing on her way. They calmed down again, falling back onto the grass to gaze at the sky. Minun sighed with an almost longing expression on his face as he let his imagination take over. “You know, it kinda makes me want to start a rescue team too. That would be so cool…”

    “Yep. It totally would.”

    “You don’t think we could… oh never mind.”

    Plusle sat up again. “Well, why not?” he answered, as if reading his friends mind.

    “WHAT!?” At this Minun literally jumped to his feet, doing a midair somersault in the process. “Me!? On a rescue team!?”

    “Sure!” Plusle answered, “I’m positive that there are Pokemon that need our help! We might even be able to meet Team Supernova!”

    “That would be great…” said Minun thinking a moment. The moment lasted only half a second before he hastily said, “Let’s do it!” He started running on the spot with excitement, but then he suddenly stopped as he realized a hole in their plan. “But, we need another team member. Who would join our team?”

    “Well…” Plusle said trying to think of a possible candidate. He paced back and forth which was what he did when he was trying to remember something. He clapped his hands suddenly as he came to a conclusion, making Minun jump slightly. “I’ve got it! Remember a few years ago when Caterpie wanted to start a rescue team and asked us to join? We could take him up on his offer. I’m sure he still wants to be on a rescue team!”

    “Hey, yeah! That’s a great idea!” Minun cried, as if his dreams were slowly but surely coming together. “Then we could go to the Pelliper Post Office to get all the stuff we need!”

    “So here’s the plan,” announced Plusle, “we’ll find Caterpie, and form a rescue team with him. Then we’ll go the Post Office and get the stuff we need. We’ll pick a mission, and we can even start rescuing today! How does that sound?”

    “Yes!” Minun said, beginning to shiver with excitement, “I’ll be on a rescue team just like Tristan!”

    Without any more to do, the two friends left Thunder Meadows, with their bold and rash idea in mind. It didn’t take long before they found Caterpie, since he could always be found in the same place.

    “You… you… you really want to make a rescue team!?” asked Caterpie in disbelief, “and… and… you’re asking me to join!?” Caterpie had the appearance of a small green caterpillar, shorter than both Plusle and Minun, though not by much. He had a pale yellow underside and small yellow ring-shaped markings that traveled down both sides of his body. This all was topped off with an orange antenna that protruded from his forehead and branched immediately into two. He had an expression on his face as if all his dreams were finally coming true.

    Elder Wiscash could be heard chuckling in the background about how energetic youngsters were these days. The water level from that night in the pond had receded back to its normal calm level, and the atmosphere was what it normally was. The gentle flow of water babbled over the rocky wall of boulders, which was topped by the dense trees of the forest. The bright morning sun reflected off of the crystal clear water.

    “Yep,” said Plulse happily. “We even thought of a team name.”

    “Team Charge-Net!” stated Minun; “You like?”

    “I can’t believe this is happening! I can finally be on a rescue team!” his eyes seemed to sparkle with delight as he said something that sounded very similar to what Plusle had heard a few minutes ago, “Wow. I’ll be on a rescue team just like Dave!”

    “Well,” Plusle said, “We were heading off to the Pelliper post office to get our supplies! You should come with us!”

    “Too bad I can’t come,” said Metapod, coming up from behind. Metapod was a great deal larger than Caterpie, though they were still very close in age (Caterpie was due to evolve soon). His entire cocoon shaped body was green with the exception of his eyes. “I’d probably only get in the way the way I am now, though…” He looked down in disappointment, but then a moment later looked back up. “You should go Caterpie! I’ll harden as hard as I can, and become a Butterfree soon! That way I can come along too!”

    “Hey that’s a great idea!” Caterpie exclaimed. He turned to his two new team members who nodded in agreement.

    “I don’t have a problem with that,” Plusle said.

    “The more the merrier, right?” Minun asked.

    Caterpie turned back to his friend. “Okay, I’m going with them for a bit. Become a Butterfree as soon as possible!” He began to leave the pond with Plusle and Minun, but turned back one last time, “I’ll tell you all about our first rescue!!”

    “I’ll be hardening until you get back! Tell me something exciting!”

    With that, the trio left the pond.

    ***

    “OH WOW!!” Minun exclaimed as they left the post office. It was a large building shaped exactly like a Pelliper, with plants growing where its wings should have been, on the top of it head and other places along its base. He stared at the badge in his hands, as if it were some kind of trophy. “I’m actually on a rescue team!!” His two other friends shared the same thoughts.

    The newly formed team turned to face the bulletin board, which was directly in front of the Pelliper shaped building. It was crammed with missions, some of them overlapping each other because of the lack of space.

    “So many to choose from,” Caterpie said, overwhelmed with the choices. “How are we gonna pick one?”

    “Um… let's choose something easy, but not too easy” suggested Plusle, scanning the board.

    “A is the easiest right?” asked Minun, “because it’s the first letter of the alphabet?”

    “I think that’s how it works,” Caterpie answered. “It makes sense to me.”

    “If that’s the case, then let's choose this mission!” Plusle said pointing at one that was close to the end of the list, just barely in his reach. He jumped to take it down, and began to read from it. “Client: Wooper, Objective: I got stuck! Save me! Place: Frosty Forest Floor 15, Difficulty: A” He lowered the letter to look at the others, “That doesn’t sound too hard, does it?”

    “No way!” said Minun, “We can totally do that!”

    “That will be a great first mission!” exclaimed Caterpie.

    “Then, that’s that!” Plusle said tucking the mission under his arm, while Minun clumsily swung the toolbox behind his back. It was a special toolbox built for small Pokemon. The downside of it was that it couldn’t hold as much as the larger ones. “Let's meet on the bridge just outside the village at noon with our supplies! Then, we’ll get going on our mission!”

    The team gathered their necessary items, such as scarves and berries. Finally, after what seemed like hours to Minun, they met at the meeting point. All set, they departed for Frosty Forest.

    “I can’t wait until Tristan sees that I’ve actually done a mission!” said Minun, beginning to shiver again with excitement.

    Caterpie gave a confused look. “Tristan?” He asked, “Who the heck is Tristan?”

    To be continued…
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    Cool, I'm not too late to the party!

    Yeah, I'm feeling better now and am able to review!

    I have a feeling this was an intro chapter into (hopefully) something long, awesome, and pwns the earlier chapters. Like you said, this was short, so there isn't much to review on, but it's good nonetheless (is that one word?).

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    nice little chapter :P
    i'll be rooting for team charge-net from my little cozy room (though they picked an A mission lol):P
    sounds like my first mistake i made when playing :P

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    Default sorry this took so long...

    looks like this time i'm the one late for the party. i thought i'd posted a review on your previous chapter, but i guess my computer screwed up again (it has a bad habit of doing that.) either way, i'll just review both!

    Chapter Nine:
    very well done; its easy to tell you are improving. descriptions were great; you described what you needed to without putting in too much, like i tend to do. the only problem was you added an "E" to the end of Gardevoir's name.

    Chapter Ten:
    again, you did very well. not much to criticize here, i particularly enjoyed the descriptions of Thunder Meadow and Plusle and Minun's houses.

    the plot is definitely starting to play out now; Tristan has finally made the connection between Team Blue's leader and his friend Dave. also, with Plusle and Minun starting a team and going on an "A" ranked mission, this could definitely be pretty interesting
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    I would say it's more of an intermezzo chapter, but it does give some focus on some very cute and enjoyable characters that usually aren't in the spotlight as much.

    Another thing that's funny is for how much they want to be on rescue teams, yet they never really do any serious research. I guess that's just the sincere hope and naivety of the young.

    Keep up the good work.

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    I read your fan-fic on Nsider,y'know?BUt i couldn't join because i'm underage.Your fan-fic's going well,keep it going!
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    @Lucarioman777: Yes indeed. Your feelings are not leading you wrong. The introductions are done, and now its time to get serious!

    I was actually tempted to make all the arcs before Frosty Forest into one, since this is when all the arcs start getting big.

    Hehe. Spell check didn't correct me on it, so I guess nonetheless is a word =P.

    @Blademaster_Jale: Thanks! I appreciate the reviews. You'll see next chapter about the outcome of their "A" ranked mission.

    @Apotheosis: I never thought of it that way, but yes, I guess you could call it an intermezzo chapter. And yeah, unfortunately for Team Charge-net they have the flaw with being too hasty and underestimating how hard rescuing can really be.

    @MudkipMagix: Oh! So you were another one of my "silent readers." Well I'm glad you've been enjoying the story so far. As you can see I've gone back to touch up on old chapters, so it will take a while for me to catch up again.

    Anyway, thanks again everyone for the replies! I'm still pretty busy, so don't expect another chapter anytime soon.


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    Cool. I could only find one little error with that chapter:

    “Team Charge-Net!” stated Minun; “You like?”
    I dunno....it could just be my L. Arts teacher's words blaring in my ear, but something tells me that should be:

    "Team Charge-Net!" stated Minun. "You like?"

    Just thought I'd point it out.

    Otherwise, this fanfic is definitely improving from when I first started 'eavesdropping' on it when Nsider was still up. (didn't have an account, remember??)


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    Awesome. I liked the chapters. Very well written. (granted, I haven't been on for a while...I just read the most recent updates in a minute in a half!)

    Wuh-oh. An 'A' mission....something tells me this is where things go downhill. xD
    Cute....but PSYCHO!!! XD Things even out.
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