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    Naughty or Nice

    A/N: I wanted to get this out before Christmas so…here we go peoples! Hope you like it! By the way, sorry if May’s POV is screwed up, it is my first time making a whole story by just one person’s POV. [May might be cursing a lot because she is stressed, so be a where of that.

    Rated: PG-13

    …:Note:... This is going to start at May’s apartment.

    Disclaimer: I do not own pokemon, or my hair apparently…

    My Horrible Life (Prologue)

    May's POV

    I could not believe it! I had gotten fired from my job, again! This was the second time in three weeks; I could not go on living like this- oh god! Damn it! Waking up from my thoughts, my blue eyes scanned the room in search of my purse; after looking for a while, I found it and started to dump all the materials out.

    “Why does this always happen to me?!” Arg, seriously! I am always doing the right thing, like volunteering in the shelter, donating what little extra money I have, even making sandwiches for the poor! Wait…I am supposed to be looking for some cash right now…

    Finally, after practically emptying my apartment of cash, I had enough money to pay the monthly rent…well, that’s for this month anyways, at the rate I am loosing my jobs; I’d probably be out of cash before you could say, ‘Baby Bottoms Bungee Jumpers’. Why you would say that, I have not a clue.

    “I need to find a job that will stick with me…maybe I should ask Melody! She has a job in that play thing…” Yeah… Melody was always telling her that she should call her if she wanted to be in it. Hm…maybe today would be her lucky day.

    “Okay…I’m going to call Melody; than go out to the park for some fresh air,” Sighing, I started to look for the phone, which had as usual been misplaced.

    “Shit. Where is the ****ing phone?” Okay…so maybe this was not my lucky day. However, it will turn up…eventually. I hope it is eventually soon! I want to start this before I run out of food…which runs out pretty fast I might add.

    “Ding! Ding! Ding! Ding!” Surprised by the sound of the phone, I jump back knocking down some books on the table… oh who cares. I will pick them up later; right now, I have to focus on finding that stupid phone….

    “Hello? May? Are you there and just ignoring me?” The sound of that familiar voice filled my head, hey what a coincidence! It was Melody! Just the person I needed to talk to; now if only I could find the goddamn phone!

    “May! I’m going to hang-up if you don’t answer!” Hey, what is that cord…? Oh, it is the phone. I should pay more attention to these things… ops, lost my train of thought again; have to answer Melody.

    “Hello Melody! Sorry I didn’t answer sooner, I sort of lost the phone again…” I could hear her laughter ringing in the phone; of course, she knew I constantly lost the phone, but she always thought it was so funny for some reason…humph…

    “Well, anyways May, I called because there was just an opening in one of our plays, so…I was wondering if you would like to audition for it with me?” she said after her giggles had stifled; once I heard what she said, I began to do a happy dance, squealing, I spoke, “I cannot believe this Melody! It was as if you read my mind or something! I was just about to call you asking if there were any spots open!” Boy was I happy! The only way this could be any better was if I had some chocolate…or ramen…

    “Hey May, why don’t you come to my house and we could make some ramen while practicing?” Wow. That is almost unbelievable. Who would have guessed that being fired would be such a good thing? Not me that is for sure…

    “Sure, I would love to! First let me change…then I’ll be right over!” I paused to get her confirmation, which was a quick “Okay,” so after another fast good-bye I hung up the phone. Well, there goes my park plans.

    “So…what should I wear today?” stalking over to my closet I looked down at my faded jeans and plain red t-shirt; I shook my head in disapproval. “Can’t wear the same thing two days in a row,” I muttered.

    Opening the closet door I looked around from messy corner to messy corner, picking up a V-Neck red sleeve top I sniffed it, “Eh…smells clean enough,” Eyeing a jean skirt that was on the ground, I grabbed it and went on-ward to the bathroom. Looking in the mirror, I smiled.

    “Maybe this job will work out…well, if I get it anyways.” After brushing my hair, teeth, and taking a shower I exited the bathroom with my outfit, the V-Neck red tank top, jean skirt, and black flip-flops.

    “I cannot wait to get to Melody’s house,” I squealed; grabbing my purse, I opened the door to be greeted by a blast of Florida sunshine. Yes, this was going to be a great day!

    After walking down what seemed to be ten hundred flights of stairs, I finally got to my car. The beat up yellow Keya was all I could afford now, but hey, as long as it had four wheels and an engine.

    Climbing into the car, I took out my keys and tired to start the engine, which, obviously failed, great day my ***. Getting out of the car I walked over to the back, and opening the door(or whatever you call it) I looked to see what was wrong, and surely enough; there was a piece of cheese, cheese, stuck in my engine. Quickly I took the cheese by the thumb and index finger; disgusted I flicked it away, getting back into the car.

    “Finally,” I mumbled, as I heard the quiet purring of the engine, taking off on the road I turned on the radio.

    “And today folks, we will be…” They music drained on in my head as I stopped at a red light, starting to drift off into my own thoughts again. Suddenly, I heard a honk, ops, looking in the rear view mirror I caught a gleams of green, green hair I think, before driving off again. While driving I now had a new question running through my mind, “Who has green hair?”

    A/N: Well? Did you like it? I personally thought it was one of my best yet! D But anyways, please inform me if there were any grammar, punication, or spelling errors; if the characters were IC (sorry about Melody, I will try and find more info on her in whatever it’s called.)
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    Disclaimer: Okay, when evil fuzzy bunnies take over the world- I own pokemon.

    Fun Fact: Did you know “Scheisse” means **** in German? Yeah, Melody’s going to use that word later on. xD [And yes Julia I know you did.

    Meeting the Snob

    May’s P.O.V

    After almost two accidents and three wrong turns (how did I get my drivers license again?) I made my way to Melody’s hotel; pulling my car into one of the parking spaces, gazed at the beautiful building in front of me. I wonder how she can afford to live here… Anyways, opening my car door, I step out to be greeted once again by the Florida sunshine.

    “What was her apartment number again?” I asked myself out loud; arg, why do I have to be so forgetful? Digging in my jean skirt for a piece of paper I might have written Melody’s suite number on, I unfortunately found nothing, well, besides my cell phone and five stupid dollars.

    Suddenly, a blue Italian (from what I could tell…) sports car pulled up in one of the empty parking spaces. Since I don’t know what else to do, I stroll over to the man coming out of the car, to see if he knows my friends suite number. When I get a good look at him, I gasp. Isn’t he the weird green haired man that honked at me before?!

    “Well? What do you want?” asked the green haired man; checking him out as he spoke, I could see he seemed to be wearing a purple T-shirt with long turquoise pants, his hair was pretty long as well, slightly covering his emerald eyes. In short- he was hott.

    “Um… hi I’m May!” Wow. Do I sound like an idiot or what?

    “Look lady, I don’t want to hear it; please, just take your pictures and leave me alone.” When he was done with his little speech, he flipped his emerald hair; while I started to fume. Who did this guy think he was?!

    “What! I have no idea what I did to you! All I did was tell you my name!” Great, I piss him off without even saying five words- isn’t that such a wonderful start?

    “Okay, I don’t have time for this, so tell me what you want or get out of my way.” Gee, he is rude. But right now he is my only chance; so here goes everything…

    “Well, um… you see I was sort of hoping that you knew my friend Melody’s suite number…” I said; I could feel the heat rushing to my face, maybe I should have asked the person at the hotel desk… mentally slapping myself I realized that was what I should have done in the first place.

    “23. And by the way, the names Drew,” He winked at me; walked inside the hotel seconds later, while I was just frozen to the spot. Evidently though, I soon got a hold of myself and walked inside the hotel as well, fortunately not seeing a gleam of green hair. Thank god. Getting inside the elevator the bell boy started to speak.

    “Hello Madame, what floor?” Um… number 23 so…

    “Second floor please,”

    “Okay, going up,” And with that, the elevator took off, but within a minute later, I was on the second floor and getting off the elevator; muttering a quick ‘Goodbye’ to the bell boy.

    “ 20, 21, 22, 23!” I mutter to myself; stopping in front of the door, I knock. Gradually, I hear foot steps approaching the door; no doubt they were Melody’s.

    I can hear Melody’s muffed voice speak, “Who is it?” of course, me being me, answer with a, “May!” hearing the locked clip un-locked I wait for the door to open. It does, but unfortunately, I’m right in front of the, ‘Melody hugging zone’

    “Hi May! I’m surprised you didn’t get lost this time!” she says, releasing me from her bone-crashing hug, I act insulted, putting my hand to my chest and doing a dramatic gasp; going inside the hotel room, sit on one of the love seats. [Melody closed the door soon after.

    “How rude!” Okay…well, I didn’t get lost this time! I got smarter and asked that ‘Drew’ guy for directions. Yeah, I’m happy now, sitting in a nice comfy seat and in a nice cool room.

    “Hey May, do you mind if some else from the play comes and practices with us? He’s Santa Clause you know.” says Melody in a knowingly voice, I laugh a little, I stopped believe in Santa when I was twelve! …Okay, okay, seventeen gees…

    “Okay, cool! So when is he going to be here?” I ask, I really want to start practicing!

    “Don’t worry May, I think he should be here in another minute…” just as Melody says this, there is another knock on the door; jumping up in surprise, I hear Melody giggle.

    “Well, that’s Drew!” I freeze. Did she just say Drew?! Oh crap. Oh crap. Oh crap. Oh crap. I can see Melody opening up the door again; maybe it’s a different Drew I think, well, until I see green hair. Drew is inside the building people, inside the building.

    After Drew comes inside the room, I stop to think for a minute; realizing that all the things added up to this, he was going to the same hotel and he knew Melody’s suite number, I mentally slap myself again, how would he know Melody’s suite number unless he knew Melody!

    “All right, Drew, this is-” before Melody could finish, Drew cut her off, how rude of him.

    “Yeah, I know who this is, May right?” Drew says smirking and flipping his hair; the arrogant son of a-

    “May, you know you’re talking out loud right?” says Melody, ops, that is my bad… glancing at Drew, I sigh.

    “Yeah…” Evil Drew, keeps smirking in my direction.

    “Well, lets get to practicing!” says Melody, she always was one to get into stuff like this.

    “Okay, so who is May going to be?” snickered Drew, (Although I think mean and weird green haired man would suite him better, but ‘Drew’ is shorter) taking out some packet of papers, as did Melody. (Except she had two packets)

    “May is going to be…” Melody pauses for a moment to look at the script, “She can be one of the elves!” An elf? How cool! I get to make all the hot chocolate and cookies! (To bad I cannot cook…)

    “Wonderful!” I say, Melody smiles and hands me a script, I make a face; how am I going to memorize all of this! I cannot even memorize Melody’s suite number!

    “Good luck memorizing all of that May- you will need it.” I fume at his comment, while Melody only giggles. “I think I could use that ramen now…” I think while starting to sulk.

    A/N: Wow, poor May. Think she can memorize all that? …Yeah, I don’t think so either, but eh. That’s live. Well, hope you enjoyed.

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    SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO many misspellings and grammer errors!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! O_O!

    loosing my jobs
    It's "losing".

    which had as usual been misplaced.
    It's "which had, as usual, been misplaced."

    ops, lost my train
    It's "oops".

    tired to start
    It's "tried".

    taking off on the road I turned on the radio
    It's " taking off onto the road, I turned the radio on."

    ops, looking in the rear view mirror
    It's "oops".

    I caught a gleams of green
    It's "gleam".

    While driving I now had a new question running through my mind, “Who has green hair?”
    It's "Now, while driving, I had a new question in my head, "Who has green hair?"".

    pulling my car into one of the parking spaces, gazed at the beautiful building in front of me.
    It's "pulled my car into one of the parking spaces, and gazed at the beautiful building in front of me.".

    Suddenly, a blue Italian (from what I could tell…) sports car pulled up in one of the empty parking spaces
    It's "Suddenly, a blue, Italian (from what I could tell...) sports car pulled into one of the empty parking spaces".

    Since I don’t know what else to do
    It's "didn't".

    In short- he was hott
    It's "hot".

    chance; so
    It's "chance. So".

    to be greeted
    It's "was greeted."

    again; have
    It's "again. I have".

    finger; disgusted I
    It's "finger. Disgusted, I".

    weeks; I
    It's "weeks. I".

    I squealed; grabbing my purse, I opened the door to be greeted by a blast of Florida sunshine
    It's "I squealed. I opened the door, grabbed my purse, and was greeted by a blast of Florida sunshine".

    said; I
    It's "said. I".

    it; please
    It's "it. Please,".

    mentally slapping myself I
    It's "mentally slapping myself, I".

    me; walked inside the hotel seconds later, while I
    It's "me, and walked inside the hotel. Meanwhile, I".

    There's too many to keep track of. I'll have to come back and keep going, I have to leave soon.

    ~Ayra~
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    -sigh- I'd rather not point out what you need to work on, I'm sure you already know. (No I'm not being mean, this is a place for improvement.)
    Although I personally thought it was a nice-lengthed story. But you might wanna proof read before you post things dear. xD
    Anyway, try your best next time around. =]
    Have a nice day and happy writing! ^^
    ~xMunkieMango

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    Wow too may words gives me headaches
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    No offense, but it's horribly written as far as the grammer and spelling goes. It's so bad, that I'm horrified. You have so much to fix that it's not funny.

    ~Ayra~

    P.S. Add me to the PM list.

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    Last edited by Ayra; 18th December 2007 at 2:04 PM.
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    "The only thing we can be is ourselves, we can't be someone else, and someone else can't be us." -Kelly Smith
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    dammit, why haven't you finished ay of your fanfics! p.s.i know what scheisse means. it means ****! :P
    talia

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    I liked that fic makes me wonder if Drew likes May or dislikes her

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