ah what you had before would have been good it would not have mattered if they were still in pallet town or not. It was an interesting chapter there were times where it felt rather rushed in my opinion doesnt mean it was good just that it felt lackin as in comparison to some of the previous chapters. You are however setting everything up quite nicely meaning developing its plot and rising poins. Description is getting better though at times it did feel that it didnt have much as well but nothin to discourage ya. Anyways good job.
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