ah so finally got around to reading the new chapter. I can say that your description is getting better and your random humor jokes never cease to amaze me in how cleverly put they are in.....however; I did find that i dunno it felt rather rushed it didnt seem to flow rather smoothly. Though I may have enjoyed it I felt it was lacking in terms of where you could have added more information and kept certain scenarios longer. That being aside now that you are getting better and grammar and description the new area is flow movement. Keep up the good work and kudos.
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I love crude humor it's the biggest thing since sliced bread and sliced bread is pretty darn good too