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    *had to look up Gible*

    Aww, I liked it ^^. Nice way of describing at least ONE environment of a captured Pokémon. I also loved the beginning, with loads more descriptions than before. Lol, I can just imagine the little thing dancing in the cold, looking for warm area.

    Hmm... I was wondering if you'd like to do a Snorlax. For some-odd reason, Snorlax seemed to be an interesting one, living up in the mountains and coming down searching for food. And eating just about anything without problems.

    Hey, there's something under all of that fat! I just know it.
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    I love these! Could you do one for ditto?

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    Wow, your Spiritomb story was fantastic. I actually laughed out loud while reading a fic which is incredibly rare for me. You won me over.

    The Shuppet and Umbreon stories were really enjoyable as well. I'll keep reading 'em if you keep posting 'em.
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    Lol at the Noob trainer, ad the Snorunt is so Kewl! if you do a Snorunt chapter, do it on that one, please!!
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    I'm gonna have to put new requests on hold for a bit, since I've got so many right now. At the current rate, I might get through this list in, hrm, three weeks? As for using that story's Snorunt, I'll give it a shot. Most of these are supposed to be unconnected, but I can repeat characters. At least that gives me an excuse to use Nadia here again!

    This entry is different. I had several ideas for Shuckle, but the traditional format of a story wasn't working out. So I've got this bit of creative writing instead.

    In process: Clamperl
    On deck: Phanpy/Donphan, Snorlax, Ditto, Snorunt


    SHUCKLE
    Ruby/Sapphire entry: Shuckle quietly hides itself under rocks, keeping its body concealed inside its hard shell while eating berries it has stored away. The berries mix with its body fluids to become a juice.


    WELCOME TO SHUCKLE VALLEY FARMS!

    And we welcome you most heartily! Shuckle Valley Farms is a community owned business that prides itself on wholesome and tasty products for your entire family. Visitors are welcome any time of the year, but don’t miss out on our famous Berry Festival that occurs the last week of July!

    About Our Farms

    Shuckle Valley is ideally located in the Veldt region to produce an abundance of berries all year round. Rain-loving berries thrive in our winters, which are more wet than cold, while dry berries adore our summers with the friendly heat. Our rich soils feed the plants so that the berries are packed with nutrients and vitamins, perfect for any lifestyle.

    About Our Pokemon

    Our namesake Pokemon are allowed to wander freely throughout the valley. The Shuckles see this place as a berry paradise. They pluck berries from the lowest branches of the bushes and tuck them away in the secondary hole on top of their vase-like shell. Once they are content, they go back to their shelter to eat some of the berries. The leftovers are then turned into a liquid that we gently juice from them once a month.

    Please note that all of our Shuckles are branded for easy identification and protected by stronger Nidorans in various stages. If you wish to gain a Shuckle of your own, please speak with the town breeder.

    About Our Families

    Shuckle Valley Farms takes great pride in the hard-working men and women of our community. We spend many long hours ensuring the quality and safety of our produce. Berry Masters take care of the berry plants while farmers take care of the various other produce that we grow. Certified Pokemon Trainers keep wild bug Pokemon and other pests from destroying or contaminating our crops while brewers and cooks develop the raw plants into tasty treats. And the children of our community often take their school lessons in the fields as well as the classroom.

    About Our Products

    Because our Shuckles live a low-stress life, their juice is of the highest quality. We maintain that same level of quality in all of our products. Here is a sampling of what we make (type often depends upon the season).

    Shuckle Berry Juice: A favorite of children and Pokemon! The unique mixture of berries in each batch makes for a fun surprise from every bottle which cannot be imitated. Our experts identify the main tastes as Sweet, Sour, Spicy, Savory, or Mild. Pasteurized.

    Shuckle Wine: For adults only. Our wines are full-bodied and sophisticated, winning dozens of awards in many regions. Perfect for your special dinner or romantic date.

    Shuckle Vinegar: An excellent cooking vinegar that imparts wonderful flavors to your sauces, marinades, and other fine foods. Drizzle over a healthy salad for a wonderful sensation of flavors. Varying strengths and flavors, which are clearly labeled on each bottle.

    Fresh berries: What sorts of berries? All sorts! We have Nanab, Razz, Bluk, Leppa, Pinap, Oran, Chesto, etc. Common berries grow in the Community Park where, for a small fee, you can pick as many berries as you can fit in a basket! Rarer berries, such as Pamtre or Iapapa, are available at the Berry Market located in the heart of our cozy village. Some berries only grow in certain seasons; you can check the availability of all berries on the community bulletin board in the Berry Market.

    Pokeblocks: Get these sweet little cubes from the Berry Market or mix your own at the Berry Blender Café. Pokemon love these treats; rumor has it that these candies can sweeten your chances on the contest stage!

    Community Notice To Pokemon Trainers

    We ask that you refrain from battling or harassing our hard-working Shuckles. These creatures are very shy and scare easily. Please keep your Pokemon stored while in Shuckle Valley Farms. If this is impractical, please keep a close eye on your Pokemon. What you may think of as a strangely smooth rock or an odd vase may in fact be a hiding Shuckle. Do not bother them; stiff fines are imposed on those who harm a branded Shuckle.

    -SVF pamphlet, Summer ‘08 edition


    Ysa's note: Why are there Savory and Mild flavored juices? Think about it: would you buy a Bitter or Dry juice?
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    lol, crazy salesman
    I liked that chapter, something new
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    The pamphlet format worked great for that, and was an awesome choice on your part. The wine bit made me chuckle. Also, the fact that you made a pamphlet fun to read is a testament to your skill!

    And sorry I never got around to commenting on the Gible one-shot! I thought it was adorable

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    Wow cool, I like the Advert style, keep up the good work!
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    And it's another double entry! What happened here was that I started off with three Pokemon in mind: Magikarp (the story was already there), Skitty (had a good idea), and Spoink (because it's name is Spoink!). But once I was done with Skitty, I was starting to get requests, so Spoink went to the backburner. When Clamperl came up, I remembered there was something connecting it to Spoink. And here it is.

    Next one is also a double, isn't it?

    In Process: Phanpy/Donphan
    On Deck: Snorlax, Ditto, Snorunt


    CLAMPERL
    Emerald entry: A Clamperl slams its shell closed on prey to prevent escape. The pearl it creates upon evolution is said to be infused with a mysterious energy.

    SPOINK
    FR/LG entry: It apparently dies if it stops bouncing about. It carries a pearl from Clamperl on its head.


    A pale mystical glow filled the shell of the Clamperl. It radiated from the large pearl that was nestled in his soft pink muscles. Gleaming like an infant moon, the pearl was almost perfect. The Clamperl caressed his treasure, adding yet another thin layer to the jewel, then polishing it to a fine satin finish. It had taken a long time to create this treasure, but it was his.

    His treasure.

    And nobody would take it from him.

    Vibrations in the water hit the outside of his white shell. Something was passing by. Something unusual. Was it a danger to his treasure? Cautiously, he lifted his top shell to peer out at the ocean floor.

    -+-

    The water was sharply cold, but the black Spoink hardly noticed. She had a thick layer of fat that kept her warm. By pumping her coiled tail, she was able to move through the water and keep her heart going. It had been a long trip over land to make this risky dive, but she had to do it. She needed a pearl.

    Being psychic, Spoinks had powerful minds. However, they were never good at focusing their thoughts, possibly due to their need to keep bouncing. It was hard to focus when one’s point of view kept changing. Long ago, a Spoink had discovered that carrying a pearl on its head would allow it to focus enough to use its powers. The best pearls came Clamperls, but the bivalves wouldn’t even think of trading. Unless a Spoink got one from a Grumpig, he or she had to dive for the pearl.

    She noticed all sorts of things about the ocean floor. There were towers of colorful coral, in peach, pink, purple, red, and yellow. There were shy water Pokemon that swam away as she drew near. There were forests of leafy kelp soaring to the surface. There were Tentacools trying to decide if she’d make a good lunch. There were lots of minerals and salts in the water, giving it a nasty taste.

    And there, resting in one of the kelp beds, was a Clamperl. His scalloped shell was covered in nicks and scratches from previous battles. There was a deep chip on the left edge of his top shell from an especially vicious fight. He was about the same size as herself. As he peered out of his shell, a faint pink glow leaked out. He must have a potent pearl to produce that glow.

    The Spoink pushed herself towards the Clamperl. The kelp bed really was fantastic; a Chinchou flicked her antennae and observed the approaching Spoink. The underwater electric Pokemon drifted off to hide behind a rock, just in case.

    No, pay attention to the Clamperl, the Spoink thought. Once she managed to get that pearl, such distractions would no longer bother her. But to get it away would require persistence.

    -+-

    A Spoink. The Clamperl didn’t have the best memory under the sea, but he could remember that Spoinks were trouble. He slammed his shell shut; she would not be getting his treasure.

    His treasure. He smoothed it over to get that perfect polished look. What was he building up this pearl for? He didn’t know. It was an instinct for his kind to make these pearls and treasure them. They were magic. What was that magic used for? He didn’t know that either, but instinct told him that one day he would leave his shell and this pearl had something to do with that. Now he just had to build it up, take care of it, and protect it from anyone who’d want it.

    His shell was tilted abruptly, disturbing his pearl’s resting place. The Spoink was bouncing on top of him. How dare she! She could have damaged his treasure! The Clamperl opened up quickly and tried to snap at her tail.

    She rocketed away from him, then spun around and rocketed back by pushing her coiled tail against a rock. When she was nearly touching his pearl, he clamped his shells together, trapping her body between them. That would teach her not to mess with him and his treasure.

    Squealing, she struggled against his hold. He held on, even as her wildly pumping tail sent them careening through the kelp bed. A neighboring Chinchou swam off as fast as she could, to escape the cloud of silt the battle kicked up. The pearl rocked about until the Spoink reached out with a prehensile curl on her head and grabbed it.

    ‘Let me go.’

    The thought wasn’t his, but the Clamperl obediently followed it, loosening his hold on the struggling Spoink. Unfortunately, she was thrown forward by the force of her tail into his interior. He was then knocked into a rock and stunned.

    -+-

    While the obsessive Clamperl was stunned, the Spoink rushed off to return to the surface. She was badly bruised, even bleeding in one place. Maybe it would have been better to wait on a Grumpig to have an extra pearl instead of fighting the bivalve. All well, what was done was done. She had her pearl.

    After escaping the ocean water and finding a safe spot on the beach, she examined her new pearl. It was a pale pretty pink of a good size. And it had that beautiful glow of strong magic. Within its polished surface, she could begin to see images and visions. She couldn’t interpret these images quite yet, but in time it could make her very wise.

    At the moment, though, she was exhausted. Bouncing slightly in one spot, she closed her eyes and went to sleep.

    -+-

    The Clamperl recovered from being stunned. However, it was still hurt from the battle. That stupid Spoink had thrashed about way too much. She could have damaged his treasure.

    His treasure? Where was his treasure? Realizing the pearl was gone, the Clamperl began to panic. What did he do now? His precious pearl was gone! He was supposed to take care of it. But if it was gone, he didn’t know what to do.

    A small jab at one of his muscles distracted him from panicking. At some point during the struggle, a sharp little pebble had gotten into his shell. That was bad. He covered the pebble in the substance he covered his old treasure with. That covered up the sharp point and turned it into a seed pearl.

    Seed pearl.

    Careful with the tiny object, he caressed it to a smooth polish. It wasn’t gleaming and it was far from perfect. But he was to build up his treasure and take care of it. His old pearl left his mind. His new pearl was his treasure. It would take a long time to build up, but it was his.

    And nobody would take it from him.
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    Hi, I don't think I've commented since the Gible one have I? Anyway, don't worry, I have been reading them, and they keep getting better . The spoink on is my favourite, I think. Prehensile coil? I always wondered how Spoink kept ther pearls on there head while they bounced, a nice idea. Somehow the obsessive-compulsive persona fits a Clampearl really well XD, well done I'm looking forward to more!
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    Wow, this is your best work yet! I like the fact that the Clamperl is like that guy with the ring from 'The Hobbit'.
    Though I don't understand the "Seed Pearl" thing...
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    His name's Golem and a seed-pearl is the term given to a pearl in its early stages. In real life oysters (not clams ) make pearls by coating a clump of sand or a small pebble in layers of what is effectively hardened saliva until it is smooth enough to not bother them.
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    I really liked that, it was interesting.
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    I just read all of them, and I love them all!
    It's cool how you build stories around the Dex entries.
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    @JammyU: Thanks for the explanation! You'll never know what you might hear about next around me.

    @MarshtompMan: Sure, I'll add you.

    The next entry should be up tomorrow morning, barring any phone line hijinks (which is entirely possible...). I've got a little offer for you in the meantime.

    Since some interest has been shown in it, I’ve decided to let other people write up this kind of story. It’d be selfish of me not to share this fun little exercise. Of course, having one person do an entry won’t stop me from writing my own for the same Pokemon; it’ll just be a bit of extra challenge to do something different. But I will impose a few rules on other writers. If you want to post a Pokedex one-shot in your own thread, you can do it however you like. But if you’d like it seen in this thread, please follow these rules.

    1. This thread is rated PG, so keep your story under that limit.

    2. If you can’t fit it into one post, it’s too long.

    3. The final version of the story must be approved by me, so please PM it to get permission to post it in this thread. If I don’t approve, I’ll explain why and point out potential improvements.

    4. Use good grammar. I’m not a grammar Nazi by any means, but there should be clarity in all writing.

    5. There must be a clear connection between the Pokedex entry and the story. In the same manner, the Pokemon you have chosen must be the main focus or theme.


    And with those rules, here are some optional guidelines.

    Which Pokemon should you choose? Any of them are open. If you pick one that’s been used before, make sure your story is noticeably different. I highly encourage choosing obscure or less popular Pokemon, to give them a chance to shine. I discourage legendaries for this exercise, but if you really want to, follow the previous advice and take a less popular one. Example: Mew, no; Regigigas, yes.

    When looking for the actual entry, I recommend choosing the R/S/FR/LG/E ‘dex here on Serebii. You’ll get the most options for the ‘flavor text’ there. Of course, if the one you pick is D/P only, you’ll have to check the listing for those games.

    Avoid outside influences... but I realize that writers tend to have minds like sponges, soaking up all sorts of this and that for use in stories. If there is an outside influence, it should be fairly obvious (Example: Tom Sawyer and Huckleberry Finn showing up in the Spiritomb entry) or you can admit it up front (Example: my Skitty entry).

    When writing a story of only a few pages, you need to be both clear and brief. Keep the plot simple so you don’t have to explain a lot for the readers to understand what’s going on.

    Remember this phrase: So very suddenly. These are the three most overused words in fiction (as I hear it), so be careful of them. But see, due to my speech habits, I tend to use ‘so’ a lot. In most places, they’re just fluff. ‘Very fast’ should only be used if the speed is extreme; ‘stopped suddenly’ is not much different than ‘stopped’. ‘So’ becomes a problem in a phrase like ‘so mad’ where, again, it’s not much different than just ‘mad’. This is more general advice than anything, but I find it helpful.

    I’m interested to see what comes of this. But remember: this is all for fun, so don’t stress out over it. If you can’t figure out a story, choose another Pokemon.
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    I'll gladly take you up on that offer . Now I just have to think of a pokemon to write about.....
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    Now as promised, the third of my doubles. I haven't played Pokemon Ranger myself, but it looks nifty.

    Btw, when I was looking up this pair, I noticed that Donphan can learn Rapid Spin... thinks of a two hundred pound plus critter spinning rapidly... scary!

    In Process: Snorlax
    On Deck: Ditto, Snorunt


    PHANPY
    Fire Red entry: As a sign of affection, it bumps with its snout. However, it is so strong, it may send you flying.

    DONPHAN
    Sapphire entry: If Donphan were to tackle with its hard body, even a house could be destroyed. Using its massive strength, the Pokemon helps clear rock and mud slides that block mountain trails.


    Orange Canyon was one of the most beautiful landscapes in the world, but also one of the deadliest. The brilliant orange, red, and yellow stone walls were sheer drops to the canyon floor, sometimes two hundred feet below. The pristine Manaphy River came in extreme white water rapids, only for the expert boater. And the patches of greenery scattered along the canyon floor often held unique Pokemon. Uniquely dangerous, though, as the land was much harsher than it appeared to be. Pokemon always mirrored the land they had come from.

    The trails that ran up and down the canyon walls were often narrow and steep. Therefore, it was somewhat of a surprise to see a large Donphan walking down one of these paths. He was three and a half feet high and bulky with muscles, but he carefully picked his way down the canyon trail. A Pokemon Ranger walked in front of him, wearing the traditional red hat and jacket. A Ranger’s jacket was a valuable piece of his equipment. It was the Swiss Army knife of clothing, a light looking piece that held far more uses than one would imagine.

    Behind the Donphan walked a Phanpy. This smaller blue Pokemon kept hold of the Donphan’s tail as they walked along. Behind that Phanpy was another Phanpy, and a third tagged along at the rear. They all flapped their ears periodically; it was already warm and small Bugs were trying to bother them. These four and their Ranger were responsible for keeping the camping area safe and enjoyable for visiting campers.

    “This doesn’t look good,” the Ranger said as they got to the canyon floor. There was a pile of yellow-orange rocks a short distance ahead, evidence of a rock slide. He had brought his team down when a camper registered at this location failed to show up. Parts of the wall were always coming loose, thanks to a proliferation of rock-eaters like Geodude and Arron. The Ranger snapped his fingers. “You three, go check it out.”

    Obediently, the three Phanpys left the line and rolled ahead. They were noticeably faster than the muddy brown Donphan, but all the members of this team were valuable. At the pile of rocks, the Phanpys sniffed around with their snouts. One trumpeted, then the other two joined in. They smelled a human trapped under the rocks.

    “Is the person you smell alive?” the Ranger asked.

    They gave two short bursts. Yes, they smelled a living person.

    “Donphan, clear the rocks, but be careful. Number three, keep your nose on the pile. One and two, clear the smaller rocks and push them away.”

    The four trumpeted in agreement and went to work. The Donphan picked up the largest rocks and set them aside. One Phanpy would then push the rocks out of the way while the other picked up what rocks she could handle. The third watched the pile, occasionally telling her partners when the pile got unstable.

    In the meantime, the Ranger pulled out his radio. “Canyon Headquarters, this is Ranger Phil. I’ve got a camper trapped under a rockslide; we’ll need a medical teleport.”

    “Confirming location... we’re getting the medical team out, wait there.”

    “Roger.”

    The supervising Phanpy called, “Phaaaa!” That was a definite call for Phil to come check something out.

    The Ranger went over. The Donphan was setting down a large sheet of rock, but didn’t move to take another off. “What’s the hold up?”

    “Fee,” she pointed, tapping a gray rock with her snout.

    A gray rock? There weren’t any gray rocks native to Orange Canyon, at least none he’d seen. Ranger Phil touched it. There was a warmth to it, and a pulse of energy. “It’s an Onix, I think. Hmm.”

    The Ranger then pulled a small gun out of his jacket. His Pokemon looked at it warily; it was sometimes necessary, even if it stung. There were spray medicines that could heal Pokemon. These were either sprayed directly onto a wound or into a Pokemon’s mouth. But if the Pokemon was too injured and couldn’t swallow anything, this needle gun was needed to apply the medicine. Phil loaded a Revive dose into it and injected it.

    It took a moment, but the Onix regained consciousness. Finding herself covered in rocks, she shook the pile away and caused two of the Phanpys to squeal. Her trainer, a geologist who’d come looking for fossils, had been right under her.

    Phil pulled out a bottle of vitamin water, specially enhanced to assist victims of dehydration. “Here you are, sir. We’ll have a healer out here for you shortly.”

    “Thank you,” the geologist mumbled before taking a long drink of water.

    “Your Onix protected you well; doesn’t appear to be much wrong with you.”

    The Onix made a proud purring sound, something odd coming from a creature made of rocks.

    “I’m sorry, Shale,” the geologist said. “I should have listened to you. I was so upset when you blacked out.”

    “Phaa,” Phanpy Number Three replied and patted the geologist on the shoulder. Unfortunately, this pushed him over.

    Phil smiled despite himself. “Oh, sorry sir. The little guys often don’t know their own strength.”
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    Ysavvryl: I like the new entry, great as aleays .

    All Pokedex One-Shot Readers: I've written my own pokedex one-shot and Ysavvryl's A-OKed it. I've posted it as a new thread though beacuse I figure I can give credit in it and therefore get this thread more readers .
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    Oh no, poor geologist... I always figured they were up to no good, with just a light backpack and a spyglass... I like how you described the Canyon and the river (Manaphy river, that has a nice ring to it!), it's very realistic. And the doting Onix was too sweet. Though I'm scratching my head as to how Phil injected that needle into a rock xD Oh, and the Phanpys are adorable. I've always loved how cute they were. Holding onto each others tails like elephants, how sweet! I think writing one of these one-shots would be a nice challenge sometime, I've never been good at one-shots

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    I think that was amazing, i loved the typical elephant behaivor and i also like how you portray some pokemon as female when I only picture them male (onix, umbreon, gible)
    it changes my whole view on them
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    Good idea, Ysavvryl, but I'm better at reading fics than writing them.

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  22. #72
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    @MarshtompMan: I stopped taking requests for a bit because I had a bunch, and I didn't really want people to wait long to see what they asked for. I'll go ahead and add that one to the list.

    To all else, I'll open up requests next round.

    Ugh, getting Snorlax's color right was annoying. At first, I thought it was pink or red; can't say why I was thinking that. Then I checked here and find out that it's blue-gray... or violet-gray... or green-gray... or if it's shiny, light blue, blue-gray, or a different light blue. Sheesh.

    If you're thinking of doing a 'dex One-shot, Snorlax basically has two different entries, as several only vary in wording. Try the R/S/E entry, as it looks pretty easy.

    In Process: Ditto
    On Deck: Snorunt, Shedinja


    SNORLAX
    Leaf Green entry: Very lazy. Just eats and sleeps. As its rotund bulk builds, it becomes steadily more slothful.


    KAAAAACK-shooo...

    It was a horrendous sound, echoing across the mountainside. It filled the minds of those who heard it. It terrified the young. It made the trees shiver. It would have rattled glass if there was any glass around. Not a single Pokemon, save one, could sleep with the awful snores pounding through their heads.

    KAAAAACK-shooo...

    “He’s a menace to our community,” a Spearow said, trying to keep his ears covered with his wings.

    “My babies shouldn’t have to grow up around this,” a Pidgeotto agreed.

    “And he doesn’t even do anything anymore,” the Spearow went on. “He wakes up, goes and eats whatever is close at hand...”

    “And he eats all the food that’s there,” a Rattata interrupted. “Won’t even share a single crumb.”

    “Then he just plops down wherever he is and goes back to sleep,” the Spearow finished.

    KAAAAACK-shooo....

    “Aaah, I can’t take this anymore!” a Geodude said. “We have to do something.”

    “But what? The fool won’t listen to reason. And just look at him! You think you can defeat that?”

    A Machoke clapped his powerful hands together. “Let’s roll him down the mountain!”

    The second Machoke there cheered the idea. “That’s the stuff! Just push him out of our neighborhood.”

    “You guys just like rolling things down the mountain,” the Geodude sniffed. “Or do you not recall ‘Bowling for Doduos’?”

    KAAAAAAACK-shooooo...

    “Oh, just let them do it,” the Pidgeotto said. “As long as it gets rid of that terrible noise, I don’t care.”

    “So can we?” the first Machoke asked.

    “All right,” the Spearow said. “But make sure it gets rid of him.”

    The two Machokes gave each other hi-fives and crept over to the slumbering Snorlax. He was a Pokemon of unbelievable girth, a rotund ball of thick fat and violet-gray fur that could sleep for days. Sometimes the little Rattatas would jump on his belly for fun, but when he was snoring, few dared to come close.

    KAAAAAACK-shooooo...

    “Right, ready?” the first Machoke whispered.

    “Ready, bro.”

    “Then let’s go.”

    They each put both hands and a shoulder against the beast, then began to shove. But even though they were the strongest Pokemon in the mountains, the Snorlax was the heaviest Pokemon in the region. Because his flesh was so soft, it was hard for them to get a good shoving position.

    “This might be too much, bro,” the second Machoke said.

    “Don’t give up. We can do this.”

    KAAAAAACK-shooooo....

    The snore rattled their bodies, making them feel sore all over. But that only added to their determination. They pushed the Snorlax up. They tilted him to get his body unbalanced. After a couple of minutes, they had him rolled over just enough that gravity took hold and pulled the Snorlax’s body down onto a slope.

    And the Snorlax rolled, to the cheers of his former neighbors. As he picked up speed, he began to break weak rocks and start small landslides. He squashed flowers, then bushes. He hit the wooded area below and knocked down trees. He hit a bump that sent him flying over a pretty white picket fence. The resulting landing was mistaken for an earthquake in the gatehouse nearby, smashing a few plates and causing someone to have a bloody nose.

    The Snorlax blinked.

    He sat up and looked at his surroundings. This wasn’t where he had gone to sleep. Nearby, he smelled the sweet scent of ripe berries. He plucked the bush from the ground and ate every bit of it: berries, leaves, branches, roots, and dirt. Then he plopped down and went back to sleep, blocking off access to the Bike Road.

    Kaaaa-shoooo...
    Pokedex OS- Still trying to capture every single Pokemon out there in words: 648/718 Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, and Sinnoh complete!

    Fluer Noir- A story of a black flower, a shameful history, and magic.

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    That was really good! You seem to have a kind of effortless simplicity to your writing. I love the Pokemon neighbours complaining, and the nosebleed was a nice touch I did always wonder how the Snorlax got next to the Cycling Road! It's quite good how despite being the subject of the piece, the Snorlax only plays a passive role. I love your dex entries

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    Did you expect something as lazy as Snorlax to play an active part in anything?

    *giggles* Sorry, couldn't resist :P
    Pokedex OS- Still trying to capture every single Pokemon out there in words: 648/718 Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, and Sinnoh complete!

    Fluer Noir- A story of a black flower, a shameful history, and magic.

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    LOL Great as usual. The mystery of Snorlax and the cycling road is solved .
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