Hooray, Ysavvryl has survived NaNoWriMo! ^^
“Well, everyone where I came from knew that,” she retorted, her pride making her angry.Bolded commas should be added.Well, he’d found his new rival, Charizard considered with a scowl.
XDDD“I came from a rock in a museum and I’m not going back.”
That made no sense whatsoever, so Charizard ignored it.
Swablu's sweet personality is adorable. :3 Weird how a big fiery dragon doesn't scare him, though, but you pulled it off smoothly anyway. *thumbs up*
Excellent job to Shiningsloth as well. The lack of dialogue added to the suspense nicely, and I love how the fossils conflicted so naturally.
This little error popped up a few times: as a possessive prounon, it should be "its", without the apostrophe. Besides that, no problems~ ^^Seaweed dripped from it's body,



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