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    Good chapter, excited to see how the tournament plays out.


    People live their lives bound by what they find as correct and true. That's how they define "reality," but what does it mean to be "correct" or "true." Merely vague concepts...their "reality" may all be a mirage. Can we consider them to simply be living in their own world. Shaped by their beliefs? ~Itachi Uchiha~

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    Is it me? or both Jyharri and Sydnie swallowed all this "light versus darkness" crap way too soon, don't you think?

    That kinda make them look like a pair of idiots, seriously.

    Besides, both versions of the story sounded too...cliché. They felt totally fabricated; like somebody has written a preach or a lecture, and then read it like a scrip in a cheap play (if that was the idea, congratulations; if not, I'd rather not mention it)

    P.D: Sorry by impersonating our official destructive critic (you know about who I'm talking about) but it is obvious this chapter is so not one of your best jobs mate, seriously. Do a best job next time, please.


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    I totally agree with asperger1981, but something else. I've lost all faith in Jyharri's character. if Aeolus had said somethging about glory, the greater good, that kinda stuff. how does Jyharri not know that "cleansing the world of sins" is a radical term for "kill everyone who disagrees with us" you're starting to make me hate Jyharri. yeah the story is not only hollow but the two groups don't contradict eachother. As far as you've shown me there is a clear good and clear evil, and btw not only was this a set-up chapter but it was a bad one, sorry thats just the truth. grammatical errors were up, the plot was poor, stacy was stitched in for no good reason, overall not your best work, combined with breaking two deadlines I'm not impressed, I hope the tourney isn't written like this. btw I hope Jyharri and Sydnie don't end up together, neither deserves happiness because their both acting like morons. can't wait for the next chapter


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    BRAVO! And the plot thickens >:3

    Okie, just a few things. There are some typos, but those can easily be fixed. My only problem with the chapter is that Jyharri and Sydnie believed them almost instantly. That's a little...bleh. There should at least be some pointless questioning and "I don't believe you" or something like that. If someone approached me wearing a dark cape or telling me that story, I would've been like, "Oh yay! Roleplay! Hang on, Imma get a cape!" Or I would run away screaming. Seriously. The man that Jyharri was talking to sounded scary, and didn't his parents ever tell him to not talk to people with a creepy look, voice and even creepier eyes? And already the man is handing him that vile even though he just now joined the team? I really think the man shouldn't have given him the vile yet since,

    A) Jyharri is a teenager. He could misplace it and let it fall into the wrong hands.

    B) Jyharri is, once again, a teenager. He could probably tell someone else about it since he thought it was cool. Or he could even be secretly working for the Black Organization or something.

    I think the man should have at least investigated Jyharri further and put spy cameras in his room or something to see if Jyharri wouldn't go against his word and tell anybody. How could Sydnie and Jyharri believe them that easily? I mean, yeah naivety is strong in childhood, but they weren't even a little suspicious of the men? Were they scared?

    Just a little suggestion there. Also, the description got a lot better =DDDDDDD Awesome job!!! Also, who cares if the chapter was so short? xP It was still good! I could tell you worked hard on this!!! Awesome job!!! =DDDDDDDD
    (Sorry if any of this review was hurtful/insulting/offensive Dx If it was, I promise that what I said was unintentional.)

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    I totally agree with asperger1981, but something else. I've lost all faith in Jyharri's character. if Aeolus had said somethging about glory, the greater good, that kinda stuff. how does Jyharri not know that "cleansing the world of sins" is a radical term for "kill everyone who disagrees with us" you're starting to make me hate Jyharri. yeah the story is not only hollow but the two groups don't contradict eachother. As far as you've shown me there is a clear good and clear evil, and btw not only was this a set-up chapter but it was a bad one, sorry thats just the truth. grammatical errors were up, the plot was poor, stacy was stitched in for no good reason, overall not your best work, combined with breaking two deadlines I'm not impressed, I hope the tourney isn't written like this. btw I hope Jyharri and Sydnie don't end up together, neither deserves happiness because their both acting like morons. can't wait for the next chapter
    The plot of the matter was vague. Overall, both stories from the Black Organization and their enemies required more depth. It wasn't poor. The members just left out a lot of details. I'm sure there are a lot of stuff that they're hiding and that they don't wish to reveal. I'm pretty sure there's a twist coming up, but I'm not sure

    I don't believe Stacy was stitched in there for no good reason. If I was trying to make a story and the setting was in a school, I would put a few hello's from students. That's the only way to make it similar to school. You've got the teachers, the friends (who are going to say hi), the lunch ladies, etc. Also, Jyharri was looking at Sydnie and Ryan and feeling bleehhh. And then, BAM! Stacy pops up. Maybe that's a sign. Also, notice how Jyharri perked up after Stacy said hi? Another clear sign and hint. Her appearance may have seemed random, but it was letting us know she was still there and there might be a strong connection between her and Jyharri.

    For the not your best work part, I have to disagree because I believe the description has gotten better. Comparing it to previous chapters, it has definitely shown improvement. I think the disappointment to the length has caused bitterness to arise. I wasn't in agreement with a few of the things that happened, such as Jyharri and Sydnie easily agreeing to the mysterious people, but, then again, I think this chapter was rushed. Shadow Lucario has been involved with a lot of stuff lately. He's in high school, which is probably piling homework on him. He's got a social life. He's probably got work. He's got a lot of things to handle, and so the exhaustion from all that stress probably caused him to rush the chapter. I completely understand where he's coming from, and, also, think about how long we had to wait for the chapter. Obviously that's a lot of stress he endured. So you got a stressful author with pressuring, eager readers patiently/impatiently waiting for him to finish. And, even under all that pressure and stress, he managed to write 8 pages. 8 decent pages. It seems short, but he spent precious time to write it. As you can see, it's got a few mistakes. A few. We can easily read past that (unless he wants us to point them out) and just enjoy the story. I don't see how the chapter was so bad; it was decent. Anyway, I just wanted to point out how Shadow Lucario is posting these on here for our satisfaction and enjoyment. Thanks, Shadow Lucario.

    (Sorry if any of what I said was hurtful/insulting/offensive Dx If it was, I promise it was unintentional.)
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    I'm not saying it sucked balls. it was fascinating, albeit predictable and cliche, I was irritated at the stacy appearance because I don't need to be reminded of her and SL hasn't bothered to remind us before, I was perfectly content until she could accomplish something useful for her to return, I feel like he threw her in there in a failed attempt to please fans.
    The entire chapter has no plot. its sad to see how such immense potential could be squandered. more could have happened in detention, more character development could have been inserted and I think you hit the nail on the head with your statement that the chapter is rushed. whether or not SL has good reason to rush the chapter, the end result was not impressive. His description may have gotten better but that only served to make a 5 page chapter of nothing into an 8 page chapter of nothing.
    @ SL: I realize my statements may seem harsh, please forgive me, I know this is your baby. but this chapter was not what the others were. I really think if you had added a little more conflict on Jyharri's and Sydnie's parts, more creativity with the back story and perhaps a little more productive dialogue, this chapter would be excellent, I know because the concept behind the chapter is very good. I'm still in love with this story and awaiting the next chapter with painful anticipation.


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    Guys you aren't harsh! D: I know where you guys are coming from. I don't really like the chapter myself. I guess I kind of wanted to get to the tournament faster so the chapter was rushed. I honestly tried to put something else in detention, but I couldn't think of anything that flowed.

    Did you guys find the foreshadowing in here though? I left a clue in here about someone that foreshadows their role in the future. Also, don't be so sure Sydnie believes the Black Organization just yet. I say Sydnie because, yes, Jyharri believes Aeolus. If someone told you that someone was going to destroy the world, would you help them? Yes, he doesn't know him. Yes, he looks creepy, but all Jyharri can see in his head is glory and recognition. I'm sure you would be well appreciated if you helped stopped the destruction of the world.

    I should have illustrated that better in the chapter. It's my fault as the author. The next four chapters will be better as they feature the tournament. I plan to go all out with these. Expect at least twenty page chapters, better illustration, better description, awesome battles, and a whole lot of plot/character development!

    One thing I want to know that everyone seems to ignore -_- Favorite characters? Like I said, Sydnie is in the lead by two votes. If you want your favorite character to win the first character poll then you better vote for them before it's too late.
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    Default Poor Sydnie

    It sucks for Sydnie. I'm taking her side for reasons I'm sure you understand. If you don't...well...you're much more dense than I thought. Thanks for the nickname btw. As weird as it might sound coming from me, it means a lot actually. Enjoy this. You'd never get it from me in person. Not in a million years.

    And these guys are right, they did swallow it pretty quickly. I'd expect such things from Jyharri but Sydnie too? I mean...aren't girls usually a little sharper than guys just as a generalization.

    Wow...I didn't realize that I knew the original numbers this well. I found it right off the bat by looking it up by the number XD Wow I'm a pokenerd.

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    Hey there readers! Shadow Lucario here with the newest chapter of Dedication Through Light and Darkness. I know it's been a while, but I wanted to make sure that this chapter was just right. This chapter marks the first round in the tournament. It contains all the first round battles. I had to rush some of them so the chapter wouldn't be so long, but I fleshed out what needed to be fleshed out. I also want to add that all of these battles were determined at random. Also, some of the winners were determined at random. Now this chapter is a monster; my longest to date. This chapter is thirty-six pages long!! I will be posting it in three posts so don't freak out when you come to the end of a post and think there is nothing else. I think that's a good length to celebrate the one year anniversary! That's right, my fan fiction has survived on SPPf for one whole year and it's all thanks to you guys! I've said enough, now enjoi!


    Dedication Through Light and Darkness

    Chapter 15: Dorm Tournament! It Begins!

    “Attention all participants in the tournament; the tournament will soon begin! Prepare your teams for battle! All of the pairings are completely random for a fair tournament! Good luck and represent your dorm well!”

    The entire island had congregated to its center. Tents varying in color from red to blue to yellow to green were scattered across the area. Many of the tents shaded students who were selling various items; others were there to shade the students who were there enjoying the little festival. Not only were the students enjoying themselves, but their Pokémon were as well. A giant board stood above a field towards the center. Two screens lay on the board, currently blank. A foot hit the field, dust appearing around it. The shoe belonged to a fairly young man.

    “This is where the tournament will be taking place Mr. Dimitrios,” said a smaller man dressed in a black suit.

    “I hope to see some great battles,” Dimitrios said with a grin. “As a tournament official you must know the match-ups. I would hope you can give me a little sneak peak of them.”

    “If I could I would sir,” said the official. “All of the matches are completely random. No one knows who is facing whom.”

    Dimitrios chuckled and turned to face the official. The official shivered as his eyes met Dimitrios’s silver ones. A chill was sent down his spine. He had never seen eyes of that color.

    “Is something the matter?” Dimitrios asked him.

    “N-no,” answered the official. “I just had a little chill.”

    “I hope you are alright.” A smirk appeared on Dimitrios’s face. “Can’t have you faint during the tournament. Let’s get ready; the tournament is starting soon.”

    “Attention all tournament participants; the tournament is about to commence! Competitors head to the competitor’s area by the field! Spectators, head to the stands and get ready to see battling like you’ve never seen in before!”

    As soon as the announcement was made a large roar of cheers erupted from the students. As the stands filled with people almost instantly, a group of students broke away from the crowd, heading towards a large building by the field. Upon entering the building the competitors instantly dispersed. Drake, Chad, and a girl from Lightning Yellow walked to the farthest wall to the right; Sydnie and Ryan sat on the tan colored couch situated in the middle of the room; Jyharri, Brandon, and Mio sat in three chairs to the right of the couch; Genevieve paced the room by herself, eyeing both Jessica and Jyharri; Jessica held one of her Pokéballs, staring at it by the door; Both pairs of twins chatted and laughed occasionally; Megan stared at Brandon, sighing often.

    The door swung open and the official that was talking to Dimitrios entered. “Attention! The first matchup is about to be announced.” A television lowered from the back wall, pictures of all the trainers flashing on and off the screen. “The first competitor is…” A picture of the girl from Lightning Yellow filled the screen. “Kimberly Marita! And her opponent is…” The girl’s picture moved to the left side of the screen as more pictures flashed on the screen. The trainers didn’t move a muscle, all holding their breath. Finally, a picture of Ryan appeared on the screen. “Ryan Davis!”

    The two competitors walked to the door, both with a smirk on their face. Kimberly flipped her dirty blonde hair as Ryan pushed his auburn hair out of his eyes. As the two left the room cheers erupted from the crowd. The two trainers stepped onto the field, moving to their respective sides.

    “First round matches will be two on two. Both sides are allowed substitutions. Take out a Pokéball,” the referee told them.

    Both trainers pulled out a ball and enlarged it, not taking their eyes off each other. As the referee raised both flags the trainers threw their Pokéballs on the field. Out of Kimberly’s Pokéball came a beaver like creature. Its small brown body did not make it seem menacing. Its front teeth seemed to be able to damage as the glinted in the sunlight. On Ryan’s side came a small creature as well. This one resembled a cat. Its pink body matched the pink end on its tail. The little pink creature did two consecutive back flips, a smile on its face.

    “Bidoof start it off with a Rock Smash,” Kimberly started off.

    The small beaver like Pokémon dashed towards the pink Pokémon with his little fist raised. As he threw a punch the little pink Pokémon jumped over him.

    “You won’t be able to his Skitty with that kind of attack,” Ryan informed her. “Skitty try and use Copycat.”

    Skitty landed on the ground, and gave a little growl before dashing towards Bidoof and hitting it with the end of her tail. Bidoof seemed dazed by the hit, reeling back. Before Bidoof knew what hit him Skitty kept up the assault, hitting him over and over with her tail.

    “This is Skitty’s Double Slap attack,” said Ryan, his arms crossed.

    “Bidoof use Hyper Fang!” Kimberly shouted.

    As Skitty went in for another hit, Bidoof opened his mouth and bit into Skitty’s tail. The little pink Pokémon let out a scream and began to run around the field, Bidoof still attached to her tail.

    “Now use Thunder!” Kimberly yelled.

    Bidoof’s body became surrounded in electricity, Bidoof’s face scrunching up. After a couple seconds all of the electricity was released, hitting Skitty point blank. The beaver Pokémon leapt back by his trainer as Skitty lay on the ground, hurt by the electricity.

    “Skitty you must get up,” Ryan pleaded, his calm composure broken.

    “Bidoof hit her with Superpower!” Kimberly ordered.

    A light surrounded Bidoof. The more Bidoof “charged up” the more light surrounded him. As more light surrounded him the brighter it got. The spectators covered their eyes to shield them from the blinding light. As Skitty started to stand Bidoof let out a cry, the light exploding out of him. The force hit Skitty head on, knocking her onto the ground again. As soon as the light vanished, the referee inspected Skitty.

    “Skitty is unable to battle,” he announced holding up a green flag. “Bidoof is the winner!”

    The crowd erupted in cheers as Ryan called Skitty back into her Pokéball. Bidoof did a little victory dance while Ryan pulled out his last Pokéball. His hand became very sweaty as the ball enlarged. A very serious look appeared on his face. If he did not win here, he was out.

    “Sceptile, time to fight,” Ryan shouted as he threw the Pokéball.

    As the ball opened a white light shot out of it, hitting the ground and materializing into a large creature. The tail it possessed resembled a palm tree branch, dark green in color. The Sceptile reared his head back and let out a growl. The little Bidoof cowered in fear.

    “Sceptile use Quick Attack!” Ryan shouted.

    As Sceptile dashed all that could be seen of him was a light green blur. In a matter of seconds Bidoof was hit. The Normal type was knocked back on his side as another green blur hit him. Bidoof didn’t have any openings for an attack. Every time he stood, he was hit by Sceptile.

    “Bidoof use Thunder!” Kimberly cried desperately.

    Once more Bidoof charged up electricity, releasing a large bolt of lightning. The attack connected with Sceptile, making him squint at the most.

    “You’re a fourth year,” Ryan told her. “You should know that when Sceptile are on the ground that electric type attacks are ineffective. Sceptile teach it a lesson with Agility, followed up with Bullet Seed.”

    Sceptile nodded at his trainer and dashed towards Bidoof. Unlike Quick Attack, when Sceptile used Agility, he couldn’t be seen. Sceptile appeared behind Bidoof and unleashed a barrage of yellow colored “bullets” upon Bidoof.

    “Counter with Rollout,” Kimberly shouted.

    Right before the “bullets” connected with Bidoof, the small brown Pokémon curled into a ball and rolled towards Sceptile like a bowling ball heading for pins.

    “Side step it Sceptile!” Ryan cried.

    Sceptile jumped slightly to the side, trying to avoid Bidoof’s attack. The edge of Bidoof scratched the ankle of Sceptile’s right foot. The Grass type staggered, losing his balance. Bidoof kept rolling, turning around and heading for Sceptile once more.

    “Jump Bidoof,” Kimberly ordered.

    The beaver like creature leaped, colliding into Sceptile’s gut. The third stage Pokémon fell onto his back, the ground shaking a bit. Still flying higher into the air Bidoof uncurled and faced the ground where Sceptile was.

    “Now use Ice Beam,” Kimberly said, excitement showing.

    A small blue orb formed in Bidoof’s mouth, a beam shooting out of it. Sceptile jumped up to one knee, looking up toward Bidoof.

    “Sceptile jump back!” shouted Ryan.

    Sceptile nodded at his trainer, attempting to dodge the attack by jumping backwards. This proved unsuccessful as when he jumped his extended left leg was hit by the beam, becoming encased in ice almost immediately. Despite just hitting his leg, Sceptile winced, taking a lot of damage. Bidoof landed in a ball, rolling at Sceptile yet again. The ice on Sceptile’s leg kept it from dodging, Bidoof hitting him square in the face.

    “Hit him with the ice!” cried Ryan.

    As Bidoof came around for another attack Sceptile lifted his leg as best he could. When Bidoof was about a meter in front of Sceptile, the Grass type brought down his leg with all of his force. Unable to stop, Bidoof was crushed under the ice, the ice shattering upon impact. As Sceptile walked back to his trainer, Bidoof stay on the ground, not moving.

    “Bidoof is unable to battle,” said the referee as he held up a red flag. “Sceptile is the winner!”

    Kimberly pulled out a Pokéball, a red beam hitting Bidoof and sucking it back into the ball. She eyed the Sceptile as she reached for her remaining Pokéballs. Sceptile was panting heavily, taking a lot of damage from Bidoof. A smile etched its way across her face as she chose one of her Pokéballs. As she tossed it, the same white light flew out of the ball, hitting the ground. The light started to materialize into a medium sized figure. When the light broke off, a creature resembling a dog started to punch the air. Its black collar matched the black wristbands it wore. Sceptile looked at its large jaw cautiously, positive it could do damage with one bite.

    “Granbull, let’s end this quick,” Kimberly told her purple companion.

    Granbull dashed at Sceptile, his jaw wide open. Sceptile tried to dodge, but winced in pain as his leg throbbed. A sharp pain shot through Sceptile’s body as Granbull latched onto the Grass type’s midsection. Sceptile looked down in horror, coming face to face with the Fairy Pokémon.

    “Try to hit him with a Leaf Blade,” Ryan said.

    The small leaves on Sceptile’s arms started to glow a light green as the extended. As Sceptile swung for Granbull’s face, the dog like Pokémon let go of Sceptile and jumped back. The tip of Sceptile’s blade hit Granbull in the face, stunning him. Seeing his chance, Sceptile kept up the assault, whacking Granbull over and over with his extended blades.

    “Ice Fang him Granbull!” cried Kimberly.

    As the Forest Pokémon swung again, Granbull dipped down to the ground, the blade missing him. His fangs became covered in ice as he leapt forward; biting into Sceptile in the same spot he had before. Sceptile let out a scream of pain, the spectators covering their ears. Granbull applied more pressure, his teeth digging into Sceptile’s skin.

    “Sceptile use Screech!” Ryan shouted.

    Sceptile looked down at Granbull and let out an ear drum piercing screech. The sound made Granbull release Sceptile and stagger backwards, paws on ears. Sceptile fell to one knee, pain running through his body.

    “You have to get up Sceptile,” cried Ryan. “If you don’t then we’ll lose!”

    Granbull shook off the ringing in his head and turned his attention towards Sceptile. An angry look took over Granbull’s face. The Fairy Pokémon ran at Sceptile, his right paw balled into a fist and glowing. Granbull’s fist connected with Sceptile’s jaw, sending him skidding against the ground, barely moving.

    “End it with Flamethrower,” said Kimberly as she turned around.

    A small flame appeared in Granbull’s mouth, growing in size. Sceptile slowly stood, his legs shaking. Granbull chuckled as he shot the flame out of his mouth, the flame extending into a stream of fire.

    “Sceptile you have to move out of the way!” yelled Ryan. “If you get hit by that you’ll be severely injured! Get out of the way!”

    Instead of doing what his trainer said, Sceptile stayed in his place, spreading his arms, welcoming the fire. Ryan watched in horror as the flames hit Sceptile head on. The force knocked Sceptile off his feet, flying about two meters into the air. The crowd gasped as Sceptile hit the ground with a loud thud. The referee looked Sceptile up and down, holding up the green flag.

    “Sceptile is unable to battle,” he announced. “The winner is Granbull! The victor of the match is Kimberly Marita!”

    An eruption of cheers emitted from the crowd, most of them coming from those in yellow. Ryan recalled Sceptile, not looking at anyone, or anything except the ground. As Sceptile was sucked into the Pokéball Ryan walked off the field and disappeared after he was out of sight. Kimberly recalled her Granbull, a half smile on her face.

    “Congrats to Kim Marita of Lightning Yellow!” a voice said over an intercom. “This is why you don’t want to mess with fourth years kids, especially you first years. Let’s start the next match right away! Let’s find out who is facing whom!”

    Kimberly returned to the area reserved for the competitors, the remaining ones watching the battle from a window. The television started to show the pictures of the competitors once again, minus Kimberly and Ryan. The first one landed on a Lightning yellow girl, her dirty blonde hair going down past her shoulders.

    “The next competitor will be Stacy Thompson,” announced the official as Stacy approached him. “Her opponent will be,”

    The pictures flashed on the screen again. As it slowed down all of the remaining competitors watched the screen intently, focused to see who would be facing Stacy. As it landed on her opponent all the people that knew Stacy gasped. Stacy turned to see who she was facing, sure she wouldn’t like it. The screen had shown a picture of her and her twin brother Craig.

    “It will be Stacy Thompson against Craig Thompson,” the official announced. “Good luck trainers. Do your best.”

    As Stacy started to walk towards the door, a hand rested on her shoulder. Having a feeling of who it might be, Stacy turned and came face to face with Jyharri. A small smile appeared on her face, the same on his. The look on his face said, “Good luck.” Craig swiftly walked past them, not making eye contact with anyone. Jyharri pulled Stacy into a long hug before letting go, Stacy walking out the door.

    “Match two is just about to start,” said a voice over the intercom. “Remember competitors; the winner gets this Pokémon egg, its contents unknown.”

    Where in the world did they get a Pokémon egg? Stacy thought to herself.

    “Here’s a fun fact: these two competitors are siblings, but not only siblings; they’re twins!” the voice said. “This should be an interesting battle!”

    The referee signaled for the two trainers to take out a Pokéball each, the trainers doing so. The referee held up a red flag and a green flag. As the referee dropped his arms, the Pokéballs flew onto the field. The familiar white light shot out from both Pokéballs. On Craig’s side of the field the light materialized into a floating figure. Two arms protruded from its side. Its clear blue body made it see through, its insides visible.

    On Stacy’s side, the creature that emerged from her Pokéball resembled a large snail that seemed to consist entirely of magma. It moved slowly, leaving burn marks in its trail. The shell on its back seemed cracked in the middle, looking like magma was about to burst out from it.

    “Magcargo, use Fire Blast!” Stacy started off.

    “Metang, use Hyper Beam!” Craig retaliated.

    Magcargo opened his mouth wide, a burst of flames shooting out. The flames formed a Japanese character, shooting towards the Metang. Metang held its hands close, an orange sphere appearing in them. As soon as enough energy was gathered, Metang pointed its hands towards the blast, the orange sphere turning into a blast. The two attacks collided, a massive explosion erupting in the middle of the field. Debris flew into the crowd, many people being pelted with chunks of earth. A large cloud of smoked covered the field, obscuring the view of the Pokémon. As the smoke cleared, both Pokémon seemed unharmed by the attacks.

    “Try a Bullet Punch, Metang,” Craig told his Pokémon.

    Both of Metang’s arms started to glow blue, as it flew straight for Magcargo. Being slow, Magcargo couldn’t dodge the fast Metang. The Steel type Pokémon punched Magcargo in the face, Magcargo sliding back a little. Magcargo turned to try and run, but Metang caught up and continued to punch Magcargo over and over.

    “Let loose a Flamethrower, Magcargo!” Stacy yelled.

    As the onslaught of punches continued, Magcargo opened his mouth, a stream of flames shooting out. The red hot flames hit Metang in the side, making it float away, its side severely injured.

    “Now use AncientPower!” said Stacy.

    A white ball began to form in front of Magcargo, increasing in size every second. Metang “dashed” towards Magcargo, trying its best to stop the energy from reaching max power.

    “Fire it,” yelled Stacy.

    The ball shot from Magcargo’s mouth hitting Metang in the same side the flames burned. The force of the attack made Metang flip backwards to his trainer. The burn on Metang’s side had started to become worse. Floating a little titled, Metang showed Craig that it still wanted to fight.

    “Are you sure Metang?” Craig asked. Worry riddled his voice, Craig trying not to show it.

    Metang nodded and straightened himself out. Magcargo spit out small flames, also ready to fight.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Sidewinder
    While it is very reminiscent of a lot of journey trainer fics, it held my attention. It stands out among a lot of the other fics I've read lately and I'm excited to continue the story.

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    [continued]

    “Metang use Meteor Mash!” Craig shouted.

    Metang flew towards Magcargo, his right hand starting to glow. Magcargo braced himself as Metang neared him. As Metang was about to make contact, its side erupted in pain, causing Metang to fall onto the ground, the glowing disappearing from its hand.

    “Magcargo finish him!” Stacy yelled. “It’s time for Lava Plume!”

    Magcargo lowered his head, the ground below the Pokémon becoming extremely hot. It had even started to crack. From the cracks, lava started to spew out. A crack appeared below Metang, lava erupting all around it. The molten magma burned Metang all over, a scream coming from Metang. As the lava seeped back into the crack Metang lay on the floor, not moving.

    “Metang is unable to battle,” the referee announced after checking Metang. “The winner is Magcargo!”

    “Metang,” Craig said as Metang turned into a red beam, being sucked back into the Pokéball. “I’m sorry.”

    Craig pulled out another ball, holding it up to his head. He started to mutter some words that were inaudible to anyone but him.

    “Any day now Craig,” Stacy yelled across the field, annoyance in her voice.

    Craig finished his muttering and a smile etched its way across his face. He tossed his Pokéball onto the field, a confident air about him. “Time for my ace to show what he’s made of! Tentacruel let’s go!”

    As the ball opened, the white light that shot out materialized into a figure that was bigger than most humans. It possessed two red crystals atop its head, the sunlight refracting off of them. It smacked its long tentacles on the ground, causing it to shake. Magcargo could barely keep his balance, tipping over on his side.

    “Magcargo return,” Stacy said as she quickly recalled Magcargo, pulling out another Pokéball. “If you’re using your ace then I might as well bring mine out. Feraligatr, show him what you’re made of!”

    The figure that emerged from Stacy’s Pokéball was also bigger than the average human, standing at seven feet and seven inches. Much like Craig’s Tentacruel, Feraligatr was a shade of blue, much lighter than Tentacruel. As soon as the light vanished from her body, Feraligatr fell forward onto all fours as most Feraligatrs did when out of water.

    “Be careful of the big jaw Tenta,” Craig told him. “It is as dangerous as it looks. That jaw can cause a lot of damage if you’re not careful.”

    “Feraligatr start things off with a Giga Impact!” Stacy commanded.

    A yellow orange energy surrounded the Water type’s body. As Feraligatr dashed at Tentacruel a purple sphere surrounded his body as well. The ground crumbled under Feraligatr, leaving a type of trail of broken earth in his path. Tentacruel put his tentacles in front of him, the attack colliding into him. Tentacruel held Feraligatr in his place the best he could. Despite having strong tentacles, Feraligatr overpowered the jellyfish and collided into him, sending him flying back. The energy disappeared from Feraligatr, the Pokémon locked in his place as if he had been paralyzed.

    “Tenta,” Craig called, “after Giga Impact is used the user can’t move for a while! Hit him with Poison Jab!”

    Two of Tentacruel’s tentacles started to glow purple. Tentacruel jumped up at Feraligatr, whacking him over and over. Feraligatr couldn’t stop the onslaught as Giga Impact had left him needing to recharge his energy.

    “Stop the attack,” Stacy finally yelled.

    As Tentacruel went for another hit, one of his tentacles was stopped by Feraligatr, his grip crushing it. Tentacruel tried to break away, but Feraligatr had him right where he wanted him.

    “Feraligatr, use Crunch!” Stacy commanded.

    Feraligatr opened his jaws wide, biting down onto Tentacruel’s head. The Jellyfish Pokémon showed his pain in his face, his eyes shut tightly. The more Tentacruel struggled, the harder Feraligatr crunched down on him.

    “Try to use Bubblebeam,” Craig said.

    Tentacruel’s beak opened, releasing a barrage of bubbles onto Feraligatr’s face. The force from the bubbles pushed Feraligatr off Tentacruel, but did not do much damage. Tentacruel looked exhausted, barely standing. Feraligatr looked like he could go for another couple hours, showing no signs of exhaustion.

    “Let’s finish this Feraligatr,” Stacy told her Pokémon. “It’s time to use Earthquake!”

    A surprised look took over Craig’s face. Tentacruel is weak to ground types! he thought. Feraligatr ran towards Tentacruel on all fours. The speed of Feraligatr was impressive, especially after battling for a while. Jumping into the air, Feraligatr quickly dropped, one foot slamming into the ground. The ground cracked even more, jagged pieces forming, looking like rocks. A shockwave was sent out, shaking the spectator’s area. Even the remaining competitor’s felt the shaking. Craig had trouble keeping his balance while Stacy was perfectly fine, being used to the attack. The shockwave hit Tentacruel, knocking him to the ground. Tentacruel tried his best to get up, not wanting to disappoint his trainer.

    “It’s over!” Stacy shouted. “Finish it with Focus Punch!”

    Rebounding from the previous attack, Feraligatr jumped forward towards the downed Tentacruel, his left fist glowing. Tentacruel tried to block, but Feraligatr pushed his way past the many tentacles, punching Tentacruel where his gut would be. Eyes wide, Tentacruel lay on the ground, not moving. Feraligatr ran back to his trainer allowing the referee to make a decision.

    “Tentacruel is unable to battle,” he announced. “The winner is Feraligatr. The victor of this match is Stacy Thompson!”

    After both trainers had recalled their Pokémon, Stacy ran over to her brother, throwing a hug on him. Craig was surprised by his sister’s actions, but smiled anyway.

    “Don’t you dare lose to anyone,” Craig told her.

    “Don’t worry,” Stacy assured him, “I won’t.”

    With a last smile, Craig walked away from his sister, heading towards the stands. A nurse had been stationed out there with a machine. Craig handed her his Pokéballs, the nurse putting them in the machine. After a few seconds the machine dinged. The nurse handed Craig his Pokéballs, a smile on her face.

    “Your Pokémon are all healed up now,” she told him.

    As Craig entered the stands, Stacy walked back to the competitor’s area, a grin on her face. Jyharri watched as the door began to open, his heart thumping. He was glad Stacy had won, hoping to do the same in his match. Stacy let out a sigh of relief as Jyharri congratulated her with a hand on her shoulder. The official cleared his throat, waiting for everyone’s attention. The remaining trainers looked towards him, determination in everyone’s eyes. The pictures began to shuffle again. This time it landed on an Ocean Blue girl. Her black hair covered the left side of her face, obscuring her left green eye.

    “The next competitor is Lexes Brown,” the official announced, “with her opponent being…”

    The pictures went through the remaining competitors faster than before, choosing a person quickly. The boy was in Fire Red, his short hair complimenting his face.

    “Mio Bunea,” the official finished.

    As the two trainers left the room the crowd was cheering like wild. The first two battles excited them, leaving them wanting more.

    “And now the third match! Lexes Brown versus Mio Bunea! The first two matches have been phenomenal! I hope this match does not disappoint!”

    “Trainers, draw your Pokéballs,” the referee instructed.

    Mio drew his Pokéball, a calm look on his face. Lexes had a complete opposite look; she looked confident, a little too confident. As the referee dropped both flags, the trainers threw their Pokéballs, light bursting from them. On Mio’s side was his Blaziken, tall and ready to fight. Flames burst from his wrists. His beak opened, a flame shooting out. On Lexes’ side was a white and brown creature that mostly resembled a tree. The Snover looked to be no threat to Blaziken.

    “Blaziken toast him with Flamethrower,” Mio started off.

    Opening his beak, Blaziken released a flame, shooting out straight at Snover. The dual Ice and Grass type jumped to the side desperately trying not to get hit with a move that could possibly knock it out instantly.

    “Snover use Water Pulse!” Lexes countered.

    After wiping herself off, Snover formed a sphere with her hands, the sphere seemingly made of water. Snover hit the sphere on the ground, the sphere rushing at Blaziken, waves coming off the sides of it.

    “Blaziken, jump over it and use Blaze Kick,” Mio chuckled.

    Blaziken easily dodged the water attack, his right foot becoming engulfed in flames as he did so. The Snover watched as Blaziken brought his flame engulfed foot down onto her head. Snover’s eyes rolled back into her head as she collapsed. Blaziken jumped back, a small tear in his eye.

    “Is Blaziken crying?” the voice said over the intercom. “Looks like he feels some sympathy for his opponent!”

    “That was a nice hit,” Lexes complimented him. “Will you knock out my next Pokémon like that?”

    Lexes launched another Pokéball onto the field, this time a purple monkey like Pokémon emerged. The similarities between it and a monkey were uncanny, except that this monkey had two tails. Not only that, but it had two hands on the ends of those tails as well.

    “Can Ambipom finish Blaziken and bring this match to a tie?” the announcer shouted.

    “Hit him with Double Kick,” Mio chuckled still.

    Blaziken jumped at Ambipom, kicking him in the face with one foot. As Ambipom began to be pushed back, Blaziken kicked him in the gut with his other foot, sending him flying into the air.

    “Finish it with Sky Uppercut,” Mio told him.

    Blaziken’s right fist began to glow a light blue. Jumping into the air, Ambipom’s face met with Blaziken’s fist, sending him even higher into the air. As Blaziken came down, tears streamed down his face.

    “And this one is over!” the announcer yelled. The referee raised his flags to verify this. “That is the quickest match we’ve had so far! Mio Bunea of Fire Red advances!”

    “Oh yes,” Lexes whispered to herself, “you’ll be very useful. The leader will be very pleased.”

    Mio folded his arms and walked back to the competitor’s area. Everyone else was surprised to see the match over so fast. Turning their attention back to the screen, the waiting competitors were all tensely watching the screen, about to see the next matchup.

    “The next match will be,” the official trailed off as two pictures appeared on the screen. The matches were being paired up faster as more people became eliminated. “The next match is Drake Darrell versus Sydnie Lake!”

    A shocked look appeared on Sydnie’s face. She would be facing the guy who beat Jyharri, who in turn beat her. Drake seemed surprised, a smile taking over soon after. Both trainers walked to the door, entering the field. Drake nodded at Sydnie with a smile while Sydnie shakily nodded back.

    “Next up is Drake Darrell, a fourth year Fire Red, versus Sydnie Lake, a first year Fire Red! This should make for one interesting matchup! Drake has only lost one battle while here at the Academy! Will he keep his near perfect record, or will Sydnie be the cause of his second loss?”

    The announcer wasn’t helping Sydnie’s nerves. Taking out her Pokéball was harder than usual, the capsule almost slipping out of her hand. The referee signaled the beginning of the match, Drake tossed his Pokéball out onto the field, a confident look on his face. Sydnie was about to throw her ball onto the field, but remembered she had to enlarge it first. Correcting her mistake, Sydnie enlarged the Pokéball and threw it out onto the field. On Drake’s side the light flew into the air and materialized into a giant moth shape. As the light vanished, it flapped its giant purple wings, a small gust of wind forming. On Sydnie’s side, her Espeon materialized onto the field, her split tail waving back and forth.

    “Smart choice by Sydnie!” the announcer shouted. “Venomoth is weak to Psychic type attacks and Espeon is probably one of the strongest Psychic Pokémon!”

    Drake’s usual cool, and collected composure was broken, his face now in a scowl. “Venomoth use Silver Wind!”

    “A nice start by Drake!” said the announcer. “Psychic types are weak to Bug types! This should be quite the battle!”

    Venomoth flapped his wings slowly, picking up speed as silver crescents shot out. Espeon waited until the crescents were about to hit when she jumped, dodging the attack.

    “Espeon use Psybeam!” Sydnie countered.

    A rainbow colored beam shot from Espeon’s eyes, heading for Venomoth in a jagged motion. Drake made a motion to Venomoth with his hand, Venomoth nodding his head. Before the attack could hit, Venomoth flew over the beam and flew directly for Espeon. Part of Venomoth’s head turned bluish white as Venomoth positioned his body for a headbutt. Espeon didn’t have enough time to react, Venomoth’s skull colliding into Espeon’s. The Psychic type flew back, stunned by the attack.

    “Follow up with a Signal Beam,” Drake commanded.

    A ball of white energy formed between Venomoth’s antennae. The ball of white energy turned into a rainbow colored beam, similar to Psybeam. As the beam hit Espeon, a cry was let out that made the crowd cover their ears again. Many thoughts ran through Sydnie’s head as she watched her Pokémon scream in pain.

    “Now use Gust!” shouted Drake, giving Sydnie barely enough time to think.

    The Bug type Pokémon flapped his wings furiously. A wind blew over Espeon hitting her over and over again. Sydnie tried to think of something to do, but nothing seemed like it would work.

    “E-espeon,” Sydnie stuttered, “try to use Swift.”

    Espeon turned her head towards Venomoth and released multiple stars, all large. The stars didn’t go very far, the gust of wind pushing them back on Espeon, damaging her even more.

    “Finish it with Tackle,” Drake confidently told his Pokémon.

    Venomoth finally stopped flapping his wings, going for a direct attack instead. Sydnie looked up at the sky, clouds obscuring the sun from view.

    Just a little longer! she desperately thought.

    Venomoth flew straight towards Espeon, his head bent low. Espeon stood shakily, barely holding herself up.

    “Try to counter with Psychic!” cried Sydnie.

    As Venomoth neared Espeon, Espeon’s eyes started to glow. Venomoth was stopped dead, a blue aura surrounding his body. Trying to wiggle free, Venomoth could not move. Espeon looked towards the ground, Venomoth flying into it. When Espeon looked up, Venomoth was thrown into the air. Espeon threw Venomoth into the ground and back into the air a couple times before collapsing. Sydnie looked up at the sky when an overjoyed look took over her face. The sun was bright and visible, no clouds near it.

    “Espeon use Morning Sun!” Sydnie hurriedly told her.

    The Psychic type’s body began to shine as rays from the sun covered her. Espeon’s bruises and scratches began to vanish as she stood up straight. Venomoth hit the ground like a ton of bricks, barely moving.

    “Espeon,” said Sydnie as a smile appeared on her face, “finish it with Tackle.”

    Espeon rushed towards Venomoth, colliding into his body as hard as she could. The Bug type skidded across the ground, stopping at Drake’s feet. He looked down in horror as he saw his Pokémon was knocked out.

    “Venomoth is unable to battle,” the referee announced as he held up the green flag. “Espeon is the winner!”

    Silent at first, the crowd erupted in cheers and whistles. Sydnie looked towards the crowd, seeing many people cheering and clapping. As she scanned the crowd she came across Ryan, a smile on his face as he gave her a golf clap. Sydnie began to blush as she turned back to Drake who already held his second Pokéball in his hand and Venomoth recalled already.

    “That was great,” Drake complimented her. “Can you beat this next one like you did the last?”

    Drake released his Pokéball, the all too familiar white light shooting out and hitting the ground. As the light started to vanish Sydnie quickly recalled her Espeon. The light completely vanished from Drake’s side, revealing his Alakazam.

    “Now Drake is using Alakazam!” the announcer shouted over the intercom. “That’s his starter, his ace, his best, the trick up his sleeve!”

    Sydnie thought about the two remaining Pokémon she had. Bulbasaur wouldn’t do too well as he is weak to Psychic type attacks. Milotic could be good as it had no weaknesses with Alakazam that she knew of.

    “Milotic, I call you,” Sydnie shouted as she threw her Pokéball.

    With an explosion of sparkles, her Milotic burst onto the field. Alakazam began to levitate, his signature spoons in hand. Milotic looked Alakazam over, carefully slithering around him.

    “Alakazam, use Shock Wave,” Drake shouted.

    Alakazam began to spin his spoons very fast. As he crossed them, a blue bolt of electricity shot out. Milotic curved her body, the electricity barely missing. A smile appeared on both Alakazam’s and Drake’s face. The bolt of electricity that missed Milotic turned around and hit Milotic in the back.

    “Didn’t you know?” Drake asked Sydnie. “Shock Wave never misses. I can keep using it over and over again and it will never miss.”

    As soon as Drake said those words, Alakazam fired another bolt of electricity which, just like Drake said, hit Milotic with perfect accuracy.
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    I need to find a way to counter it, Sydnie thought. The thing is I don’t know what to use.

    As Sydnie was thinking Milotic was hit with another bolt of electricity. Milotic frantically tried to dodge it, but the attack kept hitting its intended target.

    “I’ve got it!” Sydnie exclaimed.

    “There is nothing to get,” said Drake. “This battle will be over soon. A few more Shock Waves will finish off that Milotic.”

    Alakazam began to spin his spoons again, the electricity firing from them.

    “Now use Mirror Coat!” Sydnie shouted.

    As soon as the electricity hit Milotic a yellow-orange aura surrounded Milotic. The electricity flew off of Milotic and hit Alakazam, dealing him twice the damage. The Psychic type fell to the ground, dropping his spoons. Alakazam hurriedly grabbed his spoons and began to fix his moustache as he started to levitate.

    “Looks like that plan is ruined,” muttered Drake.

    “Milotic use Iron Head!” commanded Sydnie.

    Milotic became encased in white as she jumped at Alakazam. As he was too busy fixing his moustache, Alakazam didn’t notice the glowing Milotic flying towards him until the last second. Milotic collided with Alakazam, sending him back to Drake, landing on the ground hard.

    “Now end this with Hydro Pump,” Sydnie happily squealed.

    As the big burst of water rocketed towards Alakazam, he lifted his head, followed by raising a hand towards the water. Suddenly the water stopped, both Sydnie and Milotic shocked.

    “Don’t be so surprised,” Drake told them. “You just used the same attack. Alakazam, show them your Psychic attack!”

    Alakazam rose in the air, going up about three meters. After he finished rising, Alakazam made a motion with his hand. The water that Milotic fired at Alakazam was turned against her. The water hit Milotic square in the face. After the water had vanished it looked as if Milotic hadn’t taken any damage from the attack.

    “I’ve trained my Milotic to withstand Water type attacks and take close to no damage,” Sydnie informed him. “Now use Ice Beam!”

    A light blue sphere appeared in Milotic’s mouth, two jagged beams shooting off of it. Alakazam rose higher, attempting to dodge the beams. The ice barely grazed his leg, his foot becoming encased in ice. Alakazam lost his balance, falling to the ground yet again.

    “Get up Alakazam!” Drake shouted.

    The Psychic type tried his best to levitate, but the ice on his foot prevented him from rising. Milotic quickly slithered over to Alakazam and wrapped herself around him, binding the Psi Pokémon.

    “Hit him with Hydro Pump,” Sydnie ordered.

    Milotic reared her head back, her mouth opening wide. Alakazam tried to break free, but Milotic’s grip was not loosening one bit. As he turned a huge stream of water blasted him in the face. When Milotic let go of Alakazam, his body went limp. Milotic slithered back to Sydnie, a smile on both of their faces.

    “All right Alakazam, enough acting,” Drake said. “You’re horrible at it anyway. Let’s get serious now.”

    The ice on Alakazam’s foot shattered into tiny ice crystals as Alakazam jumped up into the air, levitating as he had before. Sydnie stared across the field, a shocked look on her face.

    “How did Alakazam withstand all those attacks?” questioned Sydnie. “He should be knocked out by now!”

    “I have had my Alakazam since it was an Abra,” explained Drake. “I’ve been training him for ten years. Knowing I would come up against tough opponents in my journey I made sure Alakazam could withstand attacks that weren’t super effective. It took a couple years, but I have finally perfected it. Thank you for furthering our training. Ref, I quit this match. If this continues both Milotic and Espeon will be severely injured and I do not wish to be responsible for such monstrosity.”

    “Drake Darrell quits,” the referee announced. “Sydnie wins the match!”

    The crowd was silent, a few mutters heard. Sydnie was also silent, not believing what had just transpired. A clap had broken the silence of the crowd. Sydnie faced the crowd and saw Ryan standing, clapping for her. Slowly, more people joined in until most of the crowd was clapping.

    “I can’t believe Drake just quit like that,” Jyharri said. “I wanted to be the one who knocked him out of this tournament. Well, now I know I’m going to win the whole thing.”

    “Don’t be so sure,” Mio told him. “I think I have a pretty good chance.”

    “You first years need to learn your place,” a voice interjected.

    Mio and Jyharri turned to face the third year Leaf Green, Chad, who was leaning against the wall with his arms crossed.

    “If anyone is winning this thing, it’s me,” said Chad.

    “Ahem,” the official cleared his throat. “The next match is about to be announced.”

    Sydnie silently slid into the room, everyone facing the screen. Two pictures appeared on the screen at the same time, showing the next match.

    “The next match is Brianna Marin versus Chad Marshall!” the official announced.

    Chad looked his opponent up and down, giving a scoff. As the two trainers exited Jyharri began to laugh.

    “What’s so funny?” Brenna asked him.

    “Brianna doesn’t stand a chance against Chad,” replied Jyharri. “I predict this match will be over in three attacks from Chad.”

    “I have to agree with Jyharri,” said Mio.

    Everyone else in the room agreed except Brenna. “You guys are mean! I’m willing to bet anything that Brianna will kick Chad’s ***!”

    “When Brianna loses,” started Jessica, “you have to give everyone in here money until you run out.”

    “Deal,” Brenna told her holding out her hand. “When Brianna wins, everyone in here must give me all their money!”

    Everyone proceeded to shake Brenna’s hand, making sure no one could back out of the bet. When the remaining competitors turned to watch the battle, there was Pokémon on both sides of the field. On Chad’s side was his starter Pokémon, Gengar while on Brianna’s side was the small, but speedy Linoone. Gengar floated above Linoone, encircling him.

    “Linoone, hit him with Quick Attack,” Brianna started.

    “Gengar, stand still,” Chad said with a chuckle.

    Gengar ceased his movements, floating right above Linoone. Linoone dashed towards one of the chunks of the broken ground, jumping on it to fly towards Gengar’s back. Gengar still remained still, not making an attempt to dodge.

    “You’re such an idiot!” Brianna laughed at Chad while Brenna laughed with her sister on the side.

    Linoone connected with Gengar’s back, or at least he thought. Instead of knocking Gengar down, Linoone flew straight through Gengar, heading straight towards the ground.

    “What in the world?!” exclaimed Brianna. “How did you do that?”

    “I didn’t do anything,” Chad told her. “Ghost types aren’t affected by Normal type attacks. You should feel some safety though. Normal types aren’t affected by Ghost type attacks.”

    “Ha!” Brianna laughed. “Now you can’t hit me either! I should have taught my Linoone some other types of attacks, but oh well.”

    “My Gengar doesn’t know just Ghost type attacks,” said Chad, a wicked smile slowly drawing itself across his face. “A trainer of Ghost types must utilize their Pokémon’s skill to learn many different types of attacks. Watch and learn. Gengar, use Brick Break!”

    Gengar’s left hand began to glow white as Gengar dropped from the air at a fast speed. As Linoone looked up, Gengar drove his hand into Linoone’s face, pushing him down into the ground. When Gengar jumped back Linoone lay on the ground, not moving.

    “Linoone is unable to battle,” the referee announced. “Gengar is the winner!”

    The crowd erupted in cheers as Brianna recalled her Pokémon and drew another Pokéball. The white light from the ball landed right in front of Gengar, materializing into her Swinub.

    “Swinub won’t lose,” Brianna said confidently.

    “We’ll see about that,” said Chad under his breath.

    “Swinub, use Icy Wind!” Brianna commanded.

    A small breeze of wind shot out of Swinub’s mouth, ice crystals shooting out with the wind. Gengar jumped to the side, easily dodging the wind.

    “Use Shadow Ball, Gengar,” said Chad.

    A ball of black energy began to gather between Gengar’s hands. Brianna pointed at Gengar, telling Swinub to stop the attack. As Swinub charged at Gengar, the ball of black energy doubled in size. When Swinub was less than a meter away from Gengar, the black energy ball shot out, hitting Swinub directly in the face.

    “Finish it with Brick Break,” Chad said as he turned away.

    Gengar jumped forward, his left hand glowing white once more. Before Swinub hit the ground, Gengar punched Swinub in the gut, smashing her into the ground. An “Ahhhhh!” came from the crowd as Swinub was driven into the ground.

    “Swinub is unable to battle,” announced the referee. “The winner is Gengar! The victor of this match is Chad Marshall!”

    Brianna silently recalled her Pokémon and sulked over to the stands, while her twin sister opened her wallet and began to distribute her money.

    “So far this first round has been filled with many surprises,” said the announcer. “We’ve seen long matches, short matches, and even a forfeit! There are only three matches left in this first round! Let us see who is up next!”

    Everyone in the stands turned towards the board high above the crowd, pictures of the six remaining trainers flickering on and off. As the flickering came to a stop, it was decided that Brandon would face Brenna in the third to last match of the first round. As the two trainers walked onto the field one person was cheering; it was Brianna.

    “Don’t worry Brianna,” Brenna told her, “I’m going to pound this loser into the ground for you!”

    “Ugh,” was all Brandon let out as he took out his first Pokéball. “As soon as both of our Pokémon are on the field I’m going to end this in less than thirty seconds.”

    “You’re funny,” laughed Brenna as she drew her own Pokéball. “I’m going to be the one winning this match and this tournament!”

    “Let the battle begin,” the referee said. This time he didn’t need to tell the trainers to take out a Pokéball.

    On Brenna’s side of the field was the Vulpix Brand and Jyharri saw her battle her sister with on the day they met while on the opposite side of the field by Brandon was a creature that resembled Squirtle, but had some differences. Not only was he taller, but now he possessed white fluffy ears on the sides of his head. His tail had changed from a small blue swirl to a longer white fluff.

    “Wartortle, use Hydro Pump,” Brandon started before Brenna had a chance to do anything.

    Just like Milotic before him, Wartortle opened his mouth wide, releasing a large jet of water. The water blast Vulpix all over, knocking it out almost immediately. Brenna and the crowd was stunned to see Vulpix knocked out so quick.

    “Vulpix is unable to battle,” the referee announce, a little surprised himself. “Wartortle is the winner!”

    Brenna recalled her Vulpix while Brandon did the same with his Wartortle. Brenna angrily drew another Pokéball, tossing it onto the field. A small blue mouse like Pokémon emerged, ready to battle.

    “How will you handle my Marill?” Brenna asked him.

    Brandon simply laughed as he tossed his own Pokéball onto the field. The Pokémon that appeared was more than ten times Marril’s size. It was Brandon’s best, Torterra.

    “That’s how I’ll handle it,” he said with a smirk.

    “Marill, use Double Edge,” Brenna said quickly, making sure she attacked first.

    The Marill charged at Torterra, gaining a significant amount of speed. The small Water type hit Torterra’s foot and bounced off, sliding back to her original position.

    “Torterra, end it with Frenzy Plant,” said Brandon as he shook his head.

    A light green aura surrounded the outline of Torterra, as he stomped the ground with his forelegs. Giant tan roots shot out of the ground, rising into the air. As the roots reached their height limit, they bent towards Marill and rocketed towards her.

    “Get out of there!” shouted Brenna.

    Marill ran in the opposite direction, hoping to outrun the roots, but the roots caught up to her, smacking into the Water Pokémon mercilessly. Marill lay face down on the ground unable to move.

    “Marill is unable to battle,” said the referee. “The winner is Torterra. The victor of this match is Brandon!”

    “What a beating!” shouted the announcer. “This match was only a mere forty-three seconds long!”

    “Thirteen seconds over what I originally planned, but I’ll take it,” said Brandon as he recalled his Torterra and walked off the field.

    “Let’s not waste any time people!” said the announcer. “The next match is…”

    There were only four trainers left; Scott, Jyharri, Genevieve, and Jessica. Whoever wasn’t in this next match would know who their opponent was in the final match of the first round. After a couple seconds of awkward silence, the board showed the next match.

    “The second to last match is Jyharri Ahmed versus Scott Martinez!” the announcer shouted into the intercom.

    Jessica and Genevieve slowly faced each other from across the room. They would be facing each other in the final match. A strange bubbling made itself noticed inside Genevieve’s stomach. She didn’t know if it was anger or just excitement that she would be facing Jessica. Before Scott and Jyharri walked onto the field, the two boys shook hands, giving each other a smile.

    “Good luck Jyharri,” Scott told him.

    Jyharri let out a laugh, a little bit of malice in the tone. “I don’t need luck; I have skill. Don’t lose too fast alright?”

    The two walked onto the field, Pokéballs already in hand. The field had been almost completely destroyed by the time Jyharri and Scott walked onto the field. Many pieces of the ground stuck out, forming a jagged, rocky field. The referee dropped both his arms, signaling the start of the match.

    “Eevee, standby for battle!” Jyharri yelled.

    “Jolteon, come forth and fight!” Scott shouted.

    Jyharri’s Eevee emerged from her Pokéball like she always does; showing off with a couple of front flips. From Scott’s Pokéball came what looked like a bigger yellow version of Eevee. His fur looked like it could take someone’s eye out with just a little poke. Near his collar he had spiky white fur, much different from the yellow.

    “Looks like we can prove you can beat your evolutions, Eevee,” said Jyharri with a small laugh. “Start by running towards him!”

    Eevee started in a dash towards Jolteon, not moving too fast, or too slow. Jolteon carefully watched Eevee’s movements, bracing himself in case she attacked.

    “Now use Shadow Ball,” Jyharri told her.

    Similar to Gengar, black energy began to form in her mouth as she ran towards Jolteon. Jolteon was prepared for an attack as he jumped over Eevee with an elegant flip.

    “Hit her with Pin Missile,” Scott said.

    While in the air, pins shot out of Jolteon’s fur, landing all around Eevee, trapping her. Eevee stopped, still gathering energy. She did an about face turning towards Jolteon, watching as he was about to land.

    “Fire it,” said Jyharri.

    The black energy ball shot out at Jolteon while he was still somewhat in the air. The ball hit Jolteon in his flank area, sending him spinning in the opposite direction of Eevee.

    “Follow up with Dig,” Jyharri continued.

    Eevee burrowed under the ground, a hole now added to the messed up field. Jolteon stood, looking around, trying to find some hint as to where Eevee would pop up at.

    “As soon as Eevee pops up use Double Kick,” Scott commanded.

    A small hole began to form under Jolteon. The Electric type jumped back, waiting for Eevee to jump out. The Normal type jumped out as expected, Jolteon reacting by leaping at Eevee, his back legs in front of him.

    “Bite his leg Eevee,” countered Jyharri.

    Before Jolteon’s foot connected, Eevee opened her mouth and bit into one of Jolteon’s legs. Eevee then proceeded to throw Jolteon into the ground with all of her strength. Jolteon jumped back onto his feet the instant he hit the ground. As Eevee landed, the two stared each other down, both waiting for a command.

    “Use Quick Attack,” Scott and Jyharri yelled in unison.

    Both Pokémon collided into each other in the blink of an eye. The two kept colliding into each other, not wanting to give up. After the collisions became tiresome the two returned to their positions, breathing heavily. Before either trainer could call an attack, both of their Pokémon fell to the ground at the same time.

    “Both Pokémon are unable to battle,” the referee said as he held up both flags. “The result is a double knockout!”

    Both Jyharri and Scott smirked as they recalled their fallen comrades and drew another Pokéball.

    “Charizard, standby for battle!” Jyharri shouted.

    “Pidgeotto, come forth and fight!” yelled Scott.

    “Looks like Jyharri wants to end this quick!” the announcer shouted. “He brought out his ace of spades! His Charizard! Scott could have brought out his, but he decides to send out Pidgeotto!”

    “Pidgeotto, use Quick Attack,” Scott said, using the same attack that Jolteon last used.

    Pidgeotto folded her wings in, diving down towards Charizard. Charizard grunted, a small flame shooting out of his nostrils.

    “Stop that bird,” Jyharri said as he pointed at Pidgeotto.

    Charizard held out his claw, grabbing Pidgeotto by the beak. Pidgeotto let out a small cry, trying to free herself from Charizard’s grip.

    “Toast her with Flamethrower,” Jyharri followed up.

    The Fire type took in a deep breath, letting out a stream of fire onto Pidgeotto. As the Flying/Normal type became shrouded in fire Charizard finally let go, letting her fall to the ground.

    “Finish it with Slash,” Jyharri said with confidence.

    “Try to dodge it,” Scott desperately told Pidgeotto.

    Pidgeotto started to stand when Charizard’s claws met her back, swatting her back to Scott, not able to continue.

    “Pidgeotto is unable to battle,” announced the referee. “The winner is Charizard! The victor of this match is Jyharri!”

    Both trainers recalled their Pokémon as the crowd cheered them on. Scott jogged across the field, holding out his hand for Jyharri to shake for a well fought match. Jyharri scoffed and walked around Scott, heading back to the competitor’s area.

    “If I’m not mistaken then we only have two trainers left,” said the announcer, not yelling for once. “Let’s bring them on out and bring this first round to a close!”

    Genevieve’s heart started to beat faster and harder. She and Jessica both exited, passing Jyharri who didn’t give either of them a glance. When they stepped onto the field, the crowd behind Genevieve seemed silent. She could only hear her pulse in her ears. She quickly drew her Pokéball, the noise now flooding into her. The crowd was cheering wildly, the referee told the trainers to start the match, and Jessica’s Pokéball cracked open, releasing her Gligar onto the field.

    “Ursaring, follow me into the fray!” Genevieve shouted once she realized she needed to send out her Pokémon.

    The giant bear roared once it was released. Jessica’s Gligar seemed tiny compared to Genevieve’s Ursaring. The Normal type patted his stomach, ready to begin.

    “Gligar use Steel Wing,” Jessica quickly told her Pokémon.

    The webbed part under Gligar’s pincers glowed white as he flew towards Ursaring. Ursaring brought his arm up, waiting for Gligar to get near him. As soon as Gligar was close enough, Ursaring swatted Gligar out of the air like a fly, driving him into the ground.

    “Now use Hyper Beam!” Genevieve shouted.

    An orange-yellow sphere formed in Ursaring’s mouth. When Gligar stood, the sphere turned into a beam, shooting out towards the FlyScorpion Pokémon. Gligar tried to jump out of the way, but the beam caught him in his lower body.

    “Gligar,” Jessica shouted worriedly.

    Ursaring stood completely still, recharging after the beam had vanished.

    “Ursaring,” Genevieve called, “once you can move hit that Gligar with Hammer Arm.”

    Ursaring nodded as he watched the Gligar slowly get up, almost falling back down again. Gligar shook his head, trying to shake off the damage he had taken from the Hyper Beam. Ursaring slowly moved his left foot, learning he regained mobility. Soon after, Ursaring’s arms began to glow as he ran at Gligar.

    “Gligar, watch out for that Hammer Arm!” Jessica warned him.

    Gligar jumped to the side as Ursaring slammed his arm down towards him. As Ursaring brought down his other arm Gligar flipped over Ursaring landing behind him, leaving him open to an attack.

    “Now use X-Scissor!” Jessica commanded.

    Gligar crossed his claws as he jumped forward. When the claws were a few centimeters from Ursaring’s back, Gligar made a slashing movement in the shape of an X. A white X shot out of Gligar’s claws hitting Ursaring in the back, making the Normal type stumble.

    “Now follow up with Slash!” continued Jessica.

    Gligar began to hack and slash at Ursaring’s back continually until the big bear fell to one knee.

    “Ursaring, use Faint Attack,” countered Genevieve.

    Ursaring turned to face Gligar, starting to make a run at him. Gligar put his claws in front of him, hoping to block the attack when Ursaring vanished. Appearing behind Gligar, Ursaring tackled him, knocking Gligar a few meters back. Gligar attempted to stand again, but fell to the ground, knocked out.

    “Gligar is unable to battle,” the referee said after checking Gligar. “Ursaring is the winner!”

    “This is not good,” Jessica said to herself while she recalled Gligar. She slowly reached for a Pokéball on her belt, pulling it off after contemplating it for a bit. “Quilava, I need you!”

    Emerging from his Pokéball, Quilava curled into a ball, spinning quickly before landing on his feet perfectly. Ursaring wasted no time as he charged towards Quilava with his arm raised. Ursaring swung at Quilava, the Fire type jumping over his arm easily. Ursaring swung again, Quilava jumping over it to dodge again. The Normal type expected this. This time Ursaring swung upwards towards Quilava who was unable to dodge, being in the air and all. Ursaring’s giant arm hit Quilava in the gut, knocking the wind out of him.

    “Toss him into the sky,” Genevieve ordered. Ursaring tossed Quilava a good fifty meters in the air, watching the Fire type helplessly fall towards the ground. “You know what to do.”

    Ursaring nodded and jumped up towards Quilava, his right arm glowing. The bear brought his glowing arm down into Quilava’s gut, driving him into the ground, the earth splitting and cracking even more. Ursaring jumped back towards his trainer, the familiar orange-yellow sphere forming in his mouth. Quilava stood and attempted to run, but he tripping over his own feet, falling to the ground, watching as the beam fired and completely missed him.

    “Ref,” Genevieve said, “if this continues then Quilava will most likely never be able to battle again. I suggest you name me the winner or Quilava will suffer the consequences.”

    “Do you want to forfeit?” the referee asked Jessica.

    Jessica bit her lip. If she forfeited then Quilava will be safe, but she would look like a chicken. If the match continued she would look strong willed and determined to win, but Quilava will never be able to battle again.

    “I,” Jessica started. “I surrender.”

    The crowd gasped almost as if it was planned. Jessica recalled Quilava as she fell to her knees. The crowd exploded with cheers, jeers, and the like. Cups flew through the air, drinks were spilled on people, and etc.

    “That’s it folks!” the announcer shouted. “That concludes our first round! The trainers that are moving on include Kimberly Marita, Stacy Thompson, Sydnie Lake, Mio Bunea, Chad Marshall, Brandon Longeway, Jyharri Ahmed, and Genevieve Jenkins! Enjoy the rest of the festival today! I will you people tomorrow for the explosive second round!”
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    hey sorry i havent been around much, but i just caught up on what i missed. Great work so far, keep up the good work
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    Talking OK! Let's do this!

    Well, it took a while, but here comes the next review from me!

    “Smart choice by Sydnie!” the announcer shouted. “Venomoth is weak to Psychic type attacks and Espeon is probably one of the strongest Psychic Pokémon!”
    Ya know, i was gonna call you out for fanboying Espeon. Then I did a bit of research and discovered Espeon is in fact one of the strongest Psychic types out there. Outside the legendaries and ubers, it's second to only Metagross.

    So, yeah. My Bad.

    Shame on you, Alakazam...

    Just like Milotic before him, Wartortle opened his mouth wide, releasing a large jet of water. The water blast Vulpix all over, knocking it out almost immediately. Brenna and the crowd was stunned to see Vulpix knocked out so quick.
    Uh, why? I wouldn't be surprised. The end of that paragraph made no sense. What have the guys and gals been in school for? Dating?

    “I have had my Alakazam since it was an Abra,” explained Drake. “I’ve been training him for ten years. Knowing I would come up against tough opponents in my journey I made sure Alakazam could withstand attacks that weren’t super effective. It took a couple years, but I have finally perfected it. Thank you for furthering our training. Ref, I quit this match. If this continues both Milotic and Espeon will be severely injured and I do not wish to be responsible for such monstrosity.”

    “Drake Darrell quits,” the referee announced. “Sydnie wins the match!”

    The crowd was silent, a few mutters heard. Sydnie was also silent, not believing what had just transpired. A clap had broken the silence of the crowd. Sydnie faced the crowd and saw Ryan standing, clapping for her. Slowly, more people joined in until most of the crowd was clapping.

    “I can’t believe Drake just quit like that,” Jyharri said. “I wanted to be the one who knocked him out of this tournament. Well, now I know I’m going to win the whole thing.”
    OK, several things wrong here:

    1. Why the hell's Drake in this school?

    2. Why would he quit when he had Sydnie so totally outclassed?

    3. Why did the crowd applaud Sydnie? She did squat.

    4. Why does Jyharri think he had half a chance against Drake, especially after getting walked by the guy? Sure, he's an egomaniacal half-wit, but still, arrogance can only be endured to such levels of credibility. Unless he's one of those guys whose "ignorance is too painful to watch." (Reference Mr Satan from DBZ) and the others simply turn a deaf ear when his oral diarrhoea gets going.

    “Toss him into the sky,” Genevieve ordered. Ursaring tossed Quilava a good fifty meters in the air, watching the Fire type helplessly fall towards the ground. “You know what to do.”

    Ursaring nodded and jumped up towards Quilava, his right arm glowing. The bear brought his glowing arm down into Quilava’s gut, driving him into the ground, the earth splitting and cracking even more. Ursaring jumped back towards his trainer, the familiar orange-yellow sphere forming in his mouth. Quilava stood and attempted to run, but he tripping over his own feet, falling to the ground, watching as the beam fired and completely missed him.

    “Ref,” Genevieve said, “if this continues then Quilava will most likely never be able to battle again. I suggest you name me the winner or Quilava will suffer the consequences.”
    That... was a rather scary OOC moment for sweet, gentle Genevieve. Hell truly hath no fury greater than a woman scorned, i suppose. I can do more than that as you gave no reason for her brutal change of nature, unless you mentioned it in an aside after Genevieve found out Jessica kissed Jyharri or she was always a little beast on the battle field.

    Just saying that could have been elaborated more on.

    All in all, one of your longest to be sure, though flat at moments when Brenna lost her bet and when Genevieve landed some smack down on Jessica. emotions weren't expounded on enough.

    Flesh 'em out more next time, a'ight?

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    Many thanks for the review Air Dragon and 221111. While writing this chapter sometimes when I pressed a key it wouldn't register in MS Word and I would continue on without noticing it until I looked over it.

    With Genevieve's change in nature, if you were female (no offense to any ladies) and you learned one of your best friends kissed the guy you liked wouldn't you want to beat the crap out of her? Well, we all know that's not allowed in schools so she did it the only way she could; a Pokemon battle. Another reason that she turned beastly was because of length. I know this isn't an excuse, but by the time I got to her battle I was already past page thirty. I wanted to keep it shorter than forty pages at least so I had to kind of rush it with some other battles.

    Brenna and Brianna are based off of these twins I know. Both of them are, for lack of a better word, dumb. I felt as if that is what they would do in that situation. I tried to emulate their lack of intelligence through their character's battle skills, or lack of. I shall take my time on the next chapter and try fleshing out the small things. If someone takes a drink I will make sure you can taste it, if someone smells something gross I will make you gag, and if someone gets hit where the sun don't shine, well I know you guys can already feel it if I add it.

    I edited the first page, adding five more chapter titles. In addition to that I also separated the chapters into arcs. I got the idea from looking at Bleach episodes so much and decided to add it to my story. In need for one more idea I decided to check an old friend of mines fan fiction so I went to EonMaster One's Pokemon Revolution: Advent Phoenix thread and saw he already took the idea. Nevertheless I still added it, but now I am crediting EonMaster One as he used the idea first. One of them might be revealing as to what happens. I hope I didn't make it to obvious. Starting tomorrow I will start work on chapter 16 after I finish my Trigonometry homework. It will most likely be finished by Sunday or Monday and be posted so be sure to check back.

    Until next time, Shadow Lucario is out.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Air Dragon
    OK, several things wrong here:

    1. Why the hell's Drake in this school?
    He's already been there for three years before. After being there for so long he will pick up some skill. If you remember Drake from my previous fan fiction then you will learn that they are the same.

    2. Why would he quit when he had Sydnie so totally outclassed?
    I'm not good at making things subtle XD He was only in the tournament for more training. He could care less about the prize or winning. Or could he have ulterior motives? Is he lying? I'm not telling :x


    3. Why did the crowd applaud Sydnie? She did squat.
    If your Pokemon survived an onslaught from the signature Pokemon of a man who is three years older than you and somehow came back I will applaud for you. That and I figured out that if one person starts clapping more people will start. I figured that out in my Business Marketing class

    4. Why does Jyharri think he had half a chance against Drake, especially after getting walked by the guy? Sure, he's an egomaniacal half-wit, but still, arrogance can only be endured to such levels of credibility. Unless he's one of those guys whose "ignorance is too painful to watch." (Reference Mr Satan from DBZ) and the others simply turn a deaf ear when his oral diarrhoea gets going.
    With Jyharri, I'm setting him for major character development. First he's up top, his cocky attitude shown not to be just talk. Then he gets whomped by Drake making him somewhat disappointed, but not completely knocking him off his high horse. Once again he loses, knocking him down more. Now he meets up with a group that can possibly make him even stronger and promise him glory in the process, boosting his ego even more. If he had never lost to Drake or Brad then he would be so arrogant, so cocky, so egotistical I wouldn't continue writing about him. I probably would have killed him.
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    good chapter, not exactly heavy on the description and I felt like Drake's surrender was just an excuse so that Sydnie could survive the first round to ultimately battle Jyharri later(its sloppy and obvious I don't wanna hear any cryptic reasoning or poor excuses) but otherwise everything I wanted. Although its going to be slightly draggy to keep listing battle after battle, put in some interveneing moments between rounds where the characters enjoy the festival. (I'm sure stacy wouldn't mind sharing cotton candy or a candied apple with Jyharri *wink wink*) poor twins they lose all their money and spend a single minute on the battle feild between the two of them lol. the battles better get longer later, these battles were kinda short, and I understand why. I'm just saying Jyharri and Sydnie's battle should encompass a whole chapter or most of it anyway. lol the twins seem to have been sleeping in their classes lol Linoone with all normal attacks against Gengar had no chance in hell(pun intended) only a couple spelling and grammatical errors.
    in summary, good chapter, can't wait for the next one ^_^


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    Quote Originally Posted by ilocar
    (I'm sure stacy wouldn't mind sharing cotton candy or a candied apple with Jyharri *wink wink*)
    Have you been in my head? That's what the beginning and middle of the second chapter is XD Now I'm going to have to change it around and I know just what to do. I'm going to spend many hours today, tomorrow, and Sunday (for you people way ahead in time yesterday, today, and tomorrow) working on chapter 16 to bring it to you guys on Sunday or the latest, Monday.
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    Hi!I think this is my first time posting here(not hither as I just typed).Ether that or I suffur from memory loss.

    First, this fic is very good.My fav charctor is Brandon.Though that could be because(dosen't sound right I know)I have a cousin called(INSERT ABOVE NAME HERE).Sorry couldn't resist.

    Anyway time for grammer.Not much mistakes I noticed.(Oh yeah, this will be from the last two chapters.)But in chappie fourteen here's a mistake.

    “Many years ago, before me, you, or even or great grandfathers two groups of people clashed with one another,” Damien began. “One called themselves the Bringers of the Light while the opposing group called themselves Those Who Hide in Darkness. While the latter name fits the group, the former’s does not. The Bringers of the Light is now known as Team Lustrous, while Those Who Hide in Darkness is now simply known as the Black Organization.
    Should be our.And if there no reltionship going to be on between Jarrayi and Sydiny STOP HINTING IT!

    Chap NO. 13.Mistake(s)=
    NO.1=

    “You won’t be able to his Skitty with that kind of attack,” Ryan informed her. “Skitty try and use Copycat.”
    Should be HIT

    NO.2

    “This is Skitty’s Double Slap attack,” said Ryan, his arms crossed.
    Qouted this because due to me misreading I thougt Ryan said"This is Skitty's Double Slap attack!His arms are crossed!".Yeah I'm stupid.

    REAL NO.2

    As soon as the electricity hit Milotic a yellow-orange aura surrounded Milotic. The electricity flew off of Milotic and hit Alakazam, dealing him twice the damage. The Psychic type fell to the ground, dropping his spoons. Alakazam hurriedly grabbed his spoons and began to fix his moustache as he started to levitate
    Not a mastake but still funny.He could lose the battle(Milotic being so awsome)and he's worried about his moustache!Now let this be a lesson for all you kids.DON'T TURN INTO AN ALAKAZAM!I don't think I'll ever find another mistace.And that's good!de-de-de-de-de-de-de-de-de-de clap clap.Sorry adam's family song in my head.

    And not a mistake but something I think.

    There were only four trainers left; Scott, Jyharri, Genevieve, and Jessica. Whoever wasn’t in this next match would know who their opponent was in the final match of the first round. After a couple seconds of awkward silence, the board showed the next match.

    “The second to last match is Jyharri Ahmed versus Scott Martinez!” the announcer shouted into the intercom.
    AND I WAS RIGHT!JENNIFER AND GENEVIEVE ARE GONNA FIGHT FOR DOMNAINCE OF JYHARRI!

    Ursaring nodded as he watched the Gligar slowly get up, almost falling back down again. Gligar shook his head, trying to shake off the damage he had taken from the Hyper Beam. Ursaring slowly moved his left foot, learning he regained mobility. Soon after, Ursaring’s arms began to glow as he ran at Gligar.
    Bolded part doesn't sound right.Made a mastake after so long.Sigh.They're spookey and they're cookie....Sorry adam's family song still in my head.

    Ursaring nodded and jumped up towards Quilava, his right arm glowing. The bear brought his glowing arm down into Quilava’s gut, driving him into the ground, the earth splitting and cracking even more.
    That will hurt in the morning.

    “Do you want to forfeit?” the referee asked Jessica.

    Jessica bit her lip. If she forfeited then Quilava will be safe, but she would look like a chicken. If the match continued she would look strong willed and determined to win, but Quilava will never be able to battle again.

    “I,” Jessica started. “I surrender.”
    And Genevieve won domiance.Cool.

    Long review(I was not typing revive!).Hoped it helped.

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    Hey there readers! Shadow Lucario here with the latest chapter of Dedication Through Light and Darkness. Like I said, I've brought you the chapter on Sunday. Remember that announcer that you kept hearing in the last chapter? Well I have given him a name and he will play a more important role later on in the fan fiction. In this chapter, the second round of the tournament takes place. This chapter is considerably shorter than the last as there are only four matches in this one. I hope there are no major errors in this chapter. Enough from me, now enjoi!

    Dedication Through Light and Darkness

    Chapter 16: Whittling Down the Competition! It Continues!

    A small breeze blew over the area where the students gathered for a tournament that would decide who deserves a mysterious Pokémon egg. Stars dotted the night sky, the moon shining off the lake in the middle of the island. Two people moved through the throng of students, staying close together. Stacy grabbed Jyharri’s hand, pulling him to a snack stand.

    “We should get a cotton candy,” Stacy told him.

    “You can get one,” said Jyharri. “I’m not really one for sweets.”

    Stacy pointed to a big swirl of red and yellow, the worker handing it to her while eyeing Jyharri. Jyharri gave him a look that said, “What?” The worker pointed at the cotton candy, more at the tag than the candy itself. Letting out a huge sigh Jyharri pulled out his wallet, handing the worker the money needed to pay for the candy. Stacy giggled as she pulled Jyharri away again.

    “I never got to know that much about you,” Jyharri told her once they were walking through the crowd again. “Where are you from?”

    “Well Craig and I come from Mossdeep City in Hoenn,” she told him. “The Gym leaders there are twins just like us. We want to become as strong as they are. What about you?”

    I hail from Blackthorn City in Johto,” replied Jyharri with some pride.

    Stacy giggled a little. “Any goals you want to accomplish?”

    “I have a few, but I can’t say what they are,” Jyharri told her. “I hope you can understand.”

    Stacy nodded, just staring deep into Jyharri’s eyes, noting they weren’t green or black, but light blue. The color mesmerized her causing her to not be able to look away. After Jyharri snapped in her face Stacy regained her usual composure. Continuing to eat her cotton candy, Stacy glanced at Jyharri a few times.

    “What is it?” Jyharri asked with a chuckle.

    “So what is your relationship with Sydnie?” asked Stacy. “She’s not your girlfriend or anything or maybe a potential girlfriend right?”

    Jyharri laughed as Stacy asked her question. “No. A lot of people ask me that, but she is just a friend. Besides, I’m interested in you, not her.”

    Stacy’s face started to turn bright red as she tried to hide herself behind the cotton candy. Jyharri shook his head and pushed the cotton candy away, pulling Stacy closer. Now she went from a bright red to almost pale in a split second. Jyharri lifted her chin ever so slightly, pulling her closer as he moved down. Stacy instinctively closed her eyes, Jyharri doing the same. As their lips touched it seemed as if everything disappeared except them. The two slowly broke apart, Stacy’s eyes still closed.

    “Are you convinced now?” Jyharri asked.

    Instead of answering the girl from Lightning Yellow pulled Jyharri towards her, kissing him again.

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    “Welcome to the second day of the school wide tournament!” yelled the announcer over the intercom. “Today we will see the second round and the semi-finals! Good luck to all you participants and we hope to see some good battles!”

    The sky had changed from black to its regular blue. The clouds moved slowly across the sky, taking up most of its space. The eight remaining trainers resided in the competitor’s room waiting for the first match to be announced. Once again Jyharri conversed with Mio and Brandon while throwing smiles and waves at Stacy. Sydnie, whom Stacy was talking to, looked between the two, a questioning look on her face. Chad was seated next to Kimberly, both of them laughing. The black suited official walked into the room, everyone stopping what they were doing and keeping their eyes glued on the official.

    “For time purposes we have already chosen the matches,” he announced. “The first match will begin immediately. We need Jyharri Ahmed and Stacy Thompson out on the field.”

    A shocked look appeared on Jyharri’s face, a petrified one on Stacy’s. Mio patted Jyharri on the shoulder for good luck. The two walked to the door, both of their mouths wide open.

    “I’m not going easy on you just because I like you,” Jyharri told her, breaking the silence. “I’ve got to prove something to a certain someone.”

    “Same here,” said Stacy. “I made a promise to my brother I wouldn’t lose to anyone, even if that someone is you.”

    “Hmph,” said Jyharri, “looks like your promise is going to be broken. I’m not losing to anyone here.

    As the trainers walked onto the field, they already had their Pokéballs in hand. Noise came from the crowd as a roar of cheers, some for Jyharri and some for Stacy. The referee raised both of his flags, waiting for the crowd to settle down.

    “The second round shall consist of four two on two battles,” the referee announced. Substitutions may be made by either side. A trainer will win when the other side’s Pokémon are unable to battle. Match begins now!”

    “Zangoose, standby for battle!” yelled Jyharri as he tossed his Pokéball onto the field.

    “Pinsir, I need you,” Stacy shouted, throwing her Pokéball as well.

    As both lights hit the ground Zangoose appeared by Jyharri while a creature that resembled a giant stag beetle appeared by Stacy. Its two pincers atop its head had spikes surrounding them, making them look even more deadly. The spikes on his feet seemed like they could do an equal amount of damage. Zangoose crouched down on all fours, growling at the giant bug.

    “Pinsir, use ViceGrip!” Stacy said.

    Pinsir ran at Zangoose, head low and pincers open wide. Zangoose leaned slightly to the side, waiting for the right moment to counter.

    “When he gets close enough use Thunderbolt,” Jyharri whispered to Zangoose.

    As Pinsir neared him, Zangoose began to charge up some electricity. Immediately before Pinsir’s pincers could clamp onto Zangoose, Pinsir was electrocuted, sliding back to Stacy. Zangoose began to run after Pinsir, his tail glowing. The Bug type held his hands over his face as Zangoose jumped into the air, slamming his tail onto Pinsir’s arms. Grabbing onto Zangoose’s tail, Pinsir slammed the Normal type into the ground.

    “Zangoose, use Thunderbolt again,” commanded Jyharri.

    Zangoose let loose another bolt of electricity, shocking Pinsir once again. Letting go of Zangoose, Pinsir stumbled backwards. Zangoose ran back to his trainer, waiting for the next command.

    “Use Stone Edge,” Stacy ordered.

    Three blue rings began to surround Pinsir. Zangoose stared at the blue rings, not knowing what was going to happen. When Pinsir pointed towards Zangoose the rings turned into stones, rocketing at Zangoose. Zangoose tried to jump out of the way, but the stones pelted him one after another.

    “Try to use Crush Claw,” yelled Jyharri.

    Zangoose’s right claw began to glow as the stones pelted him. The Normal type swung his claw up, knocking away the rest of the stones. Pinsir was shocked to see his attack deflected with one swing. Zangoose charged Pinsir, his right claw still glowing.

    “Pinsir, counter with Hyper Beam,” Stacy quickly told him.

    An orange sphere began to form in Pinsir’s pincers, growing by the second. The Bug type bent forward, firing the beam. Zangoose leapt over the beam, still flying towards Pinsir.

    “Pinsir can’t move people!” the announcer informed the spectators. “After a Pokémon uses Hyper they must recharge! Pinsir is wide open for an attack!”

    Zangoose slashed Pinsir in the face, knocking him to the side. Jyharri made a clicking noise with his teeth, which Zangoose reacted to. A flame appeared in his mouth, growing just like the orange sphere Pinsir fired. A stream of flames shot out of Zangoose’s mouth towards the defenseless Pinsir. Pinsir watched in horror as the flames engulfed his body, doing a considerable amount of damage. Pinsir fell to the ground, not moving.

    “Pinsir is unable to battle,” the referee announced. “The winner is Zangoose!”

    Stacy’s mouth hung open as she recalled Pinsir. I can’t lose here, she angrily thought to herself. She pulled out another Pokéball, kissing it before throwing it onto the field. The light hit the ground and materialized into a small rodent like creature. Her tail formed a red addition symbol.

    “Stacy sends out her Plusle to battle Jyharri’s Zangoose!” the announcer shouted. “I don’t think that was such a good idea on Stacy’s part as Plusle is only good in a double battle with its partner Minun.”

    “Let’s show them what we can do,” said Stacy. “Use Quick Attack!”

    Plusle dashed towards Zangoose, only seen as a yellow and red blur. A red light hit Zangoose, pulling him back into his Pokéball. Plusle skidded to a stop, a confused look on her face.

    “For some reason Jyharri has recalled Zangoose,” the announcer shouted, a little surprised.

    “If you’re going to prove what you can do, might as well do it against my best Pokémon,” said Jyharri. “Charizard standby for battle!”

    From the Pokéball emerged the large dragon like Pokémon known as Charizard. As usual Charizard fired a flame into the air from his mouth. Charizard searched the field for his opponent, looking confused when he could not find them.

    “Charizard,” Jyharri whispered loudly, “look down!”

    Charizard looked down at his opponent. Plusle waved at Charizard, a weak smile on her face. Charizard looked back at Jyharri with an expression that said, “Are you serious?!” Jyharri nodded and pointed at Plusle. The small Electric type let out an electric bolt, shocking Charizard to the very core of his body. Charizard stumbled forward, starting to fall down. Plusle tried to run away, but Charizard’s body crushed her. The Fire type shook his head and stood up, turning to face Plusle again. Plusle was laying face first on the ground, the ground broken to the shape of Plusle’s body. Plusle stood up, stumbling around trying to regain her balance.

    “Charizard, use Flamethrower,” said Jyharri, laughing a little.

    Charizard sighed and shot out a flame. Plusle stumbled to the left, barely dodging the flame. Surprised his attack missed, Charizard fired another flame which Plusle dodged again. Becoming angry Charizard kicked Plusle into the air, shooting the flame at her while she was flying up. Plusle screamed in agony, the flames burning her. When she hit the ground a soft thud was heard. Charizard shot flames out his nostrils, knowing he finished her off. To his surprise the small creature stood up, legs shaking badly.

    “Plusle you can’t fight anymore,” Stacy told her. “It would be best if you give up now.”

    Plusle started to run at Charizard, slowly at first. Charizard watched the little Pokémon advance towards him. Charizard stopped Plusle with his foot, playing with her now. Plusle let out another bolt of electricity, a smaller one this time. The bolt hit Charizard, but did much less damage than the first. The attack made Charizard flinch at most.

    “Charizard, end her suffering,” said Jyharri. “End it with Blast Burn.”

    Charizard pushed Plusle back and jumped into the air, starting to fly. The Fire type began to channel all of his flames into his gut, attempting to recreate what he did a few days ago. Taking in a deep breath, Charizard blew out, expecting to see the fireballs. All that came out of Charizard’s mouth as hot air, making the surrounding areas noticeably warmer. Once again Jyharri was shocked to see the attack fail a second time.

    “Charizard’s Blast Burn attack has failed!” the announcer announced. “What an upset! That would have taken Plusle out the instant it hit!”

    Charizard grew angry with himself. This was the second time he failed Jyharri. The dual type touched back down on the ground, not moving. Charizard faced Jyharri, both of them nodding. Charizard closed his eyes and held out his arms to the side. Plusle was surprised at Charizard’s actions. He was leaving himself wide open.

    “Plusle, this is our chance!” Stacy told her. “Hit him with Thunder and use every ounce of power you’ve got!”

    Plusle fired a huge bolt of electricity from her body. This electric bolt was three times bigger than the first. The bolt hit Charizard, knocking him down immediately. The crowd gasped as Charizard hit the ground.

    “Charizard is unable to battle,” the referee announced. “The winner is Plusle!”

    As the crowd started to cheer for Plusle, the Electric type fell to the ground. The referee looked Plusle up and down. After a few seconds Plusle was not moving, completely exhausted from the last attack.

    “Plusle is unable to battle,” said the referee. “Since Jyharri has one remaining Pokémon the victor of this match is Jyharri!”

    Half of the crowd cheered and the other half jeered while both trainers recalled their Pokémon. The two met in the middle of the field, shaking each other’s hand. A small tear appeared in the corner of Stacy’s eye. After they released their hands Stacy headed into the crowd, joining her brother while Jyharri returned to the competitor’s area.

    “The next match shall be Kimberly Marita versus Chad Marshall,” announced the official once Jyharri entered the room.

    The two trainers sitting down stood and exited the room, no noise coming from either of them. Once they were on the field Chad turned to Kimberly and said, “Good luck Kim.”

    “You too,” she said.

    When the trainers were on their respective sides they both selected one Pokéball. A smirk appeared on Chad’s face, a smile on Kim’s. The referee signaled the start of the match by bringing down both of his flags.

    “Gengar, let’s give them a fright!” Chad said as he threw his Pokéball.

    “Mothim, let’s dance!” said Kim, throwing her Pokéball as well.

    “This should be an interesting match-up folks!” said the announcer. “Chad is a third year Leaf Green while Kim is a fourth year Lightning Yellow! Don’t go anywhere! You do not want to miss this!”

    “Gengar use Shadow Ball,” started Chad.

    “Shadow Ball should take some time to get to max power,” Jyharri told the others. “Mothim can get in an attack.”

    When the black energy appeared in between Gengar’s hands it instantly increased, making it four times its original size. Jyharri was shocked. How did he get so much power so fast? Gengar threw the ball at Mothim, the energy ball flying towards him at a high speed. Mothim gracefully dodged the ball by floating to the side.

    “Mothim, use Silver Wind,” Kim said.

    Mothim flapped his wings towards Gengar, silver crescents shooting out. Gengar quickly moved up and down, avoiding all of the crescents.

    “Fire a Night Shade,” Chad ordered.

    Two dark purple beams shot out of Gengar’s hands, hitting Mothim head on. The Bug type furled up his wings. Once he spread them again the attack was pushed off of him. Mothim then proceeded to fire a ball of greenish-blue energy out of his mouth in the form of a sphere. The ball hit Gengar in the side, making him grab it immediately.

    “Gengar,” Chad yelled, “show them your energy ball!”

    Gengar began to charge up the same greenish-blue energy in between his hands. In about three seconds, the ball was double the size of Mothim’s.

    “Mothim, counter with Shadow Ball,” said Kim.

    Now Mothim began gathering black energy, just like Gengar did before. Mothim’s black energy ball reached the same size as Gengar’s greenish-blue ball. The two Pokémon fired the spheres, the energy colliding in the air. A small explosion erupted on the field. An enormous dust cloud covered the trainers and Pokémon. The spectators began to cover their mouths and eyes, waiting for the cloud to disperse. When the dust cloud vanished, Gengar was seen on Mothim’s back, holding him in a choke hold. Mothim tried to break free, but Gengar’s grip was too tight.

    “Gengar let’s end this,” decided Chad. “Hit him with Thunderbolt.”

    Gengar nodded and let loose an electric bolt similar to Plusle’s, but much smaller in size. When Gengar let go of Mothim, the Bug type fell to the ground not moving a muscle. Gengar floated above, being cautious of his opponent.

    “Mothim is unable to battle,” the referee decided after a couple seconds. “The winner is Gengar!”

    Kim pulled out another Pokéball while she recalled Mothim. The ball cracked open once she threw it, releasing the familiar white light. When the light vanished, a fox like Pokémon sat on Kim’s side of the field. Her fur was a luxurious golden-white color. Her most outstanding feature was her nine orange tipped tails. The ruff atop her head blew in the small breeze that began to pick up. Many more clouds appeared in the sky, some of them being storm clouds.

    “Gengar return,” said Chad as he recalled Gengar. “Nidoqueen, give them a fright!”

    “Now it’s going to be Chad’s Nidoqueen against Kim’s Ninetails!” said the announcer. “Nidoqueen has the advantage being part ground, but we have seen stranger things happen.”

    “Ninetails start things off with Fire Spin,” Kim said.

    The fox like creature stood on all fours, opening her mouth. From her mouth came a spiral of flames. As the flames neared Nidoqueen, the Poison/Ground type used her giant blue forearms to block the flames.

    “Nidoqueen, use Focus Punch,” said Chad.

    Still blocking the flames, Nidoqueen’s right fist began to glow. Nidoqueen pushed the flames away, surprising Ninetails. The Poison type charged at Ninetails, the ground shaking. As the ground shook Ninetails found it hard to keep her balance. When the Fire type did regain her balance a fist hit her in the face. The Fox Pokémon flew back to her trainer, hitting the ground quite hard.

    “Follow up with Brick Break,” Chad told Nidoqueen.

    Now Nidoqueen’s left fist began to glow. Charging Ninetails once more, Nidoqueen leapt forward, bringing her fist into Ninetails’ gut. Surprisingly, Ninetails spit out flames which hit Nidoqueen in the face. Nidoqueen stumbled backwards, clutching her face. Ninetails stood, panting and groaning.

    “Nidoqueen, use Hyper Beam,” Chad shouted.

    An orange sphere appeared in Nidoqueen’s mouth, growing bigger by the second. After about ten seconds the sphere turned into a beam once it shot out from Nidoqueen’s mouth. Ninetails jumped over the beam, landing shakily. Nidoqueen stomped her foot on the ground causing the ground to tremor even worse than before. Ninetails fell to her side, trying to move.

    “Finish it Nidoqueen,” said Chad, “use Body Slam.”

    Nidoqueen jumped into the air over Ninetails. The Fire type quickly moved out of the way, barely dodging the attack. Ninetails then fired a stream of fire at Nidoqueen. The flames hit Nidoqueen in the torso area, burning her side. Nidoqueen grasped her side, a pained expression on her face. Ninetails breath was heavy. If Ninetails was hit with another strong attack it would be all over. Suddenly, a red light hit Nidoqueen.

    “Looks like Chad is doing the smart thing and is recalling Nidoqueen,” said the announcer. “Now a wounded Ninetails will have to fight a rested up Gengar!”

    Gengar emerged from his Pokéball looking as if he hadn’t been in battle yet. Ninetails tried to focus her vision on Gengar, but all she could see was three purple blurs.

    “Gengar finish this with Shadow Punch,” Chad told him.

    Gengar flew towards Ninetails in a zigzag fashion, his left fist becoming surrounded in purple lightning bolts. Ninetails leaned to the side, seemingly dodging the attack. Right when Ninetails was about to counterattack, the force of a punch hit her in the side of the jaw, knocking her back. The crowd gasped. The referee examined Ninetails for a moment before holding up the green flag.

    “Ninetails is unable to battle,” he announced. “The winner is Gengar. The victor of this match is Chad!”

    Just like before, the crowd erupted in cheers, very few booed Chad. After recalling their Pokémon the trainers smiled at each other.

    “Great battle,” said Chad.

    “I’m going to be cliché and say the next time we meet, I won’t lose,” Kim said with a laugh.

    Chad chuckled and started to walk back to the competitor’s area. Kim shook her head with a smile and jogged into the stands. When Chad entered the competitor’s area Jyharri patted him on the back while the others congratulated him.

    “Yes it was a nice battle,” said the official, “but now it’s time for another. The next match is Sydnie Lake versus Mio Bunea.”

    As both trainers exited the room, the announcer was reminding the crowd of the prize that one trainer would win. The referee reminded them of the rules before they each drew a Pokéball. Once the match was started both trainers tossed their Pokéballs onto the field. Blaziken appeared from Mio’s and Milotic from Sydnie’s.

    “As the third match of the second round begins we have Sydnie’s starter Pokémon against Mio’s ace!” yelled the announcer. “This match is shaping up to be a good one!”

    “Blaziken use Flamethrower,” started Mio.

    Just like Charizard and Ninetails before him, Blaziken released a stream of fire from his beak.

    “Milotic, counter with Aqua Ring,” said Sydnie.

    A vortex of water surrounded Milotic. When the flames connected with the water, steam appeared over the field. As the vortex vanished, Milotic was surrounded by three rings of water. The water sparkled in the sunlight, making her very visible in the mist. Some people in the crowd became impressed at Sydnie’s beautiful counter.

    “Wouldn’t expect anything less from a former coordinator,” said the announcer. “That counter showed off Milotic’s beauty and power.”

    “It will take much more than contest moves to beat me,” said Mio. “Blaziken show them Blaze Kick.”

    Blaziken launched itself high into the air, his right foot becoming engulfed in flames. The Fire type outstretched his leg, now coming down in a leg drop position.

    “Milotic use Rain Dance,” Sydnie countered.

    A blue ball of energy appeared in Milotic’s mouth, not growing in size like the other energy attacks. Milotic shot it up into the air towards Blaziken. Not knowing what it was, Blaziken side flipped out of the way, landing about a couple meters away from Milotic. The blue energy ball busted in the air, turning into a dark rain cloud, much like the others in the sky. Rain started to pour from the cloud Milotic created. The water drenched Milotic’s body, the serpentine creature appearing to be even slicker. As if influenced by Milotic’s attack, rain began to come from the other storm clouds. As a drop hit Blaziken, he flinched. The rain started to pour now. The crowd complained at the sudden rain, but thanks to modern technology they were prepared. Many umbrellas began to unfold in the crowd.

    “Oh no,” Mio exclaimed. “This is bad!”

    “Milotic, whack him with your tail,” Sydnie commanded.

    Milotic slid across the ground, approaching Blaziken. When she was close enough, Milotic swung her tail around, hitting Blaziken in the gut. Blaziken doubled over in pain.

    “Finish him with Aqua Tail,” yelled Sydnie.

    A spiral of water surrounded Milotic’s tail. Bringing her tail back around, the water hit Blaziken in the back of the head, knocking him on the ground. Blaziken’s face landed in a small puddle that was created by the rain, increasing the damage.

    “Blaziken is unable to battle,” yelled the referee. “The winner is Milotic!”

    Mio recalled Blaziken as he took out another Pokéball. He tossed the ball onto the field, the ball proceeding to crack open and release a white light. When the light finished materializing, a small green Pokémon remained.

    “What the heck is that cactus looking thing?” someone yelled from the crowd.

    “It’s a Cacnea,” the person next to him said. “Even though it’s small those spikes on its arms can do a lot of damage.”

    “Cacnea use Needle Arm,” said Mio.

    Cacnea’s arm began to glow a bright green as she jumped towards Milotic. Milotic slithered to the side, dodging the small Pokémon. As Cacnea landed, she landed in a puddle, causing her to slip and fall on the ground.

    “Great,” Mio said as he clasped his hand to his face. “I’m going to need Nurse Joy and a lawyer.”

    “Milotic, hit her with Twister,” said Sydnie.

    Milotic pointed the end of her tail at Cacnea. A small tornado began to appear. After tripling in size, the tornado spun its way towards Cacnea. The strong gusts of wind blew Cacnea into the air. The Cactus Pokémon fell into the tornado, bouncing off the walls of it. Once the tornado vanished Cacnea was seen lying on her back. Cacnea slowly, but surely stood up.

    “Cacnea, try to use Energy Ball,” Mio said.

    A greenish-blue energy started to form in Cacnea’s mouth, sometimes almost vanishing. Once enough energy was gathered, the ball of energy shot towards Milotic. The sphere of greenish-blue energy was about half the size of Mothim’s.

    “Milotic, use Ice Beam to freeze it,” Sydnie commanded.

    A blue sphere appeared in Milotic’s mouth. Three jagged beams shot off the ball, all hitting the greenish-blue sphere. The latter froze instantly, now a solid.

    “Now knock it back,” yelled Sydnie.

    Before the sphere could fall to the ground, Milotic used her tail like a baseball bat, whacking the ball back at Cacnea. Cacnea tried to move, but was too tired to jump out of the way in a dramatic fashion. Right before the ball could hit, Cacnea swung her arm, shattering the ball into millions of green ice crystals.

    “Hit her with Water Pulse,” said Sydnie.

    Milotic began to fire balls of water at Cacnea, three of them connecting successfully. When Milotic was about to fire a fourth, Cacnea shot another greenish-blue sphere out. The sphere hit Milotic in the face. The water ball that Milotic was about to fire was now shot up into the air as Milotic reared her head. The ball came back down, hitting Milotic in the face.

    “Now use Needle Arm,” shouted Mio.

    Cacnea once again jumped at Milotic with her arm glowing light green. Before Milotic could react, Cacnea smacked her in the face with her arm. Milotic fell back and hit the ground.

    “Are you alright?” asked Sydnie.

    Milotic returned to her upright position, trying to shake off the damage. Cacnea began to pant, partly from the damage she had taken and from attacking so much. Both Mio and Sydnie knew that the next attack would end it. A lightning bolt struck down somewhere in the background, the crack of thunder following some time after.

    “Use Ice Beam,” shouted Sydnie.

    “Fire an Energy Ball!” yelled Mio.

    At almost the exact moment, both attacks shot out. Three blue jagged beams hit Cacnea all over her small body while Milotic was struck by the greenish-blue energy ball. Both Pokémon hit the ground not moving a muscle.

    “Both Pokémon are unable to battle,” shouted the referee as he held up both flags. “Due to having one Pokémon left over, the victor of this match is Sydnie!”

    A quarter of the crowd cheered loudly while the other three quarters stayed silent. Mio recalled his Cacnea with a sigh. Without saying a word Mio strolled off the field, meeting a Leaf Green girl at the entrance of the bleachers.

    “Time for the last match,” the official said once Sydnie entered the competitor’s area. “The last match is Genevieve Jenkins versus Brandon Longeway. It’s time to end this round!”

    By the time Genevieve and Brandon walked onto the field the rain had started to settle. The rain was now coming down as a sprinkle. After tossing their Pokéballs, Ursaring appeared to face Brandon’s Wartortle. If the match was determined by size then Ursaring would win hands down. Ursaring slashed at Wartortle, barely grazing his belly. Wartortle countered with a swipe with his tail. Ursaring grabbed Wartortle’s tail and began to slam him into the ground over and over again.

    “Wartortle, use Withdraw,” yelled Brandon.

    Wartortle returned his head into his shell, quickly followed by his hands, feet, and tail. With nothing left to hold onto, Ursaring dropped Wartortle on the ground.

    “Hit that shell with Hammer Arm,” said Genevieve.

    As Ursaring brought down his glowing left arm, Wartortle began to spin in his shell.

    “Use Hydro Pump,” Brandon said.

    Water shot out of the five holes on Wartortle’s shell, spraying Ursaring in the face five times. Wartortle then popped out of his shell, landing on his feet. The Normal type stumbled backwards.

    “Ursaring, use Hyper Beam,” yelled Genevieve.

    The familiar growing orange sphere appeared in Ursaring’s mouth. Wartortle’s tail started to glow as he prepared to charge the giant bear. When Wartortle began to run towards Ursaring, the sphere turned into a beam. Wartortle leapt over the beam and hit Ursaring in the face with his glowing tail.

    “Hit him with Skull Bash,” yelled Brandon.

    The Water type bent his head low, jumping at Ursaring. Just like Pinsir before him, Ursaring could not move for a while. Wartortle’s skull crashed into Ursaring’s gut, the bear losing his breath for a minute. Ursaring fell to the ground, knocked out.

    “Ursaring is unable to battle,” the referee announced. “Wartortle is the winner!”

    “Absol, let’s fight together,” Genevieve shouted as she recalled Ursaring and threw her second Pokéball.

    From the white light emerged a completely white Pokémon, save for his face and tail. This Pokémon had a scary look, intimidating Wartortle a bit.

    I can’t believe I’m using Absol! Genevieve angrily thought to herself. Absol hasn’t had nearly as much training as Ursaring!

    “Wartortle, use Focus Punch,” Brandon shouted.

    Wartortle’s left fist began to glow as he charged at Absol. Absol ran to the side, about to dodge the attack. Too bad for Absol that he was entirely too slow. Wartortle punched Absol in the flank, making him spin in many circles.

    “Try to use Slash Absol,” Genevieve said, losing her confidence.

    When Absol stopped spinning, the claws on his right claw began to glow. Jumping at Wartortle, Absol slashed at the Water type. Wartortle easily dodged the attack being much faster than his opponent.

    “Blast him with Hydro Pump,” said Brandon.

    A giant jet of water shot out from Wartortle’s mouth, hitting Absol in the face. Absol reared back, stunned by the water. Wartortle advanced on his opponent, punching Absol in the face. As Wartortle’s assault continued, Absol started to become angry. When Wartortle became tired of beating up Absol his attacks started to become slow. When Wartortle swung for another punch, Absol parried with the sickle-shaped growth on the side of his head. Surprised by the attack, Wartortle let his guard down. Absol began his onslaught of slashes with his claws and sickle.

    “Wartortle, use Aqua Tail,” Brandon tried to counter.

    Just like Milotic, a spiral of water appeared around Wartortle’s tail. After a slash from Absol, Wartortle swung his tail around, whacking Absol in the throat. Absol began coughing like crazy while Wartortle’s right fist began to glow.

    “Now use Focus Punch,” commanded Brandon.

    Wartortle threw his fist at Absol, connecting with his face. Absol was knocked to the ground, finally motionless.

    “Absol is unable to battle,” said the referee after a few seconds. “Wartortle is the winner! The victor of this match is Brandon!”

    A group of Lightning Yellow students began to cheer as the referee announced the outcome. Some students from the other dorms clapped, but most of them chatted amongst themselves. Brandon and Genevieve both recalled their Pokémon, the sun finally emerging through the clouds.

    “Well folks,” said the announcer, “that concludes the second round! The four remaining trainers are Jyharri Ahmed, Sydnie Lake, Chad Marshall, and Brandon Longeway! These hard working competitors need to get their equally hard working Pokémon healed up and prepared for the next round. This is Tom Jones saying I will see you guys later today for the semi final round!”
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    Quote Originally Posted by Sidewinder
    While it is very reminiscent of a lot of journey trainer fics, it held my attention. It stands out among a lot of the other fics I've read lately and I'm excited to continue the story.

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    Rember me?I read chap NO.(I will refer all chapters as chap NO.)16, and liked it!But now its time for revewing=

    NO.1

    Stacy’s face started to turn bright red as she tried to hide herself behind the cotton candy. Jyharri shook his head and pushed the cotton candy away, pulling Stacy closer. Now she went from a bright red to almost pale in a split second. Jyharri lifted her chin ever so slightly, pulling her closer as he moved down. Stacy instinctively closed her eyes, Jyharri doing the same. As their lips touched it seemed as if everything disappeared except them. The two slowly broke apart, Stacy’s eyes still closed.

    “Are you convinced now?” Jyharri asked.

    Instead of answering the girl from Lightning Yellow pulled Jyharri towards her, kissing him again.
    So Stacy gained domaince.Gwenivive is not going to be happy.

    NO.2

    Earlier on do....
    Stacy nodded, just staring deep into Jyharri’s eyes, noting they weren’t green or black, but light blue. The color mesmerized her causing her to not be able to look away. After Jyharri snapped in her face Stacy regained her usual composure. Continuing to eat her cotton candy, Stacy glanced at Jyharri a few times.
    Unexplained....Or explained two chaps ago.

    NO.3

    “For time purposes we have already chosen the matches,” he announced. “The first match will begin immediately. We need Jyharri Ahmed and Stacy Thompson out on the field.”
    Just together and already their frist fight.Sigh.They grow up so fast.

    NO.4

    From the Pokéball emerged the large dragon like Pokémon known as Charizard. As usual Charizard fired a flame into the air from his mouth. Charizard searched the field for his opponent, looking confused when he could not find them.
    Anyone who thinks this is not funny will be tried

    “Charizard,” Jyharri whispered loudly, “look down!”
    Anyone who thinks this is not funny will be prosacotaid

    Charizard looked down at his opponent. Plusle waved at Charizard, a weak smile on her face. Charizard looked back at Jyharri with an expression that said, “Are you serious?!” Jyharri nodded and pointed at Plusle. The small Electric type let out an electric bolt, shocking Charizard to the very core of his body. Charizard stumbled forward, starting to fall down. Plusle tried to run away, but Charizard’s body crushed her. The Fire type shook his head and stood up, turning to face Plusle again. Plusle was laying face first on the ground, the ground broken to the shape of Plusle’s body. Plusle stood up, stumbling around trying to regain her balance.
    Anyone who thinks this is not hilarious will be shot.Just telling it as it is.

    NO.5

    “Now it’s going to be Chad’s Nidoqueen against Kim’s Ninetails!” said the announcer. “Nidoqueen has the advantage being part ground, but we have seen stranger things happen.”
    Ninetails Psy-wave her ***.

    NO.6

    “Great,” Mio said as he clasped his hand to his face. “I’m going to need Nurse Joy and a lawyer.”
    Cacnea sues his trainer?

    NO.7

    At almost the exact moment, both attacks shot out. Three blue jagged beams hit Cacnea all over her small body while Milotic was struck by the greenish-blue energy ball. Both Pokémon hit the ground not moving a muscle.
    I'll get you for this!Poor Milotic.Starts weeping

    NO.8

    Wartortle’s left fist began to glow as he charged at Absol. Absol ran to the side, about to dodge the attack. Too bad for Absol that he was entirely too slow. Wartortle punched Absol in the flank, making him spin in many circles.
    Their faster then Wartotles!

    No mistakes so far.Thats good!

    NO.9

    “Well folks,” said the announcer, “that concludes the second round! The four remaining trainers are Jyharri Ahmed, Sydnie Lake, Chad Marshall, and Brandon Longeway! These hard working competitors need to get their equally hard working Pokémon healed up and prepared for the next round. This is Tom Jones saying I will see you guys later today for the semi final round!”
    Tom Jones...I heard that somewhere.Ah well.

    I could find no mistakes at all.

    Well this is eevlotiun saying I will see you next chapter!
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    Many thanks for the review eevlotion. I am going to start work on the 17th chapter this weekend. I am predicting this will be my longest chapter so far, even longer than chapter 15. I am covering three events in this chapter with two of them covering about fifteen pages apiece. I don't know how long the third event will be, but I guess it will depend on my mood. I am still collecting votes for your favorite characters as well. Sydnie is still in the lead. On another note I have begun selecting themes for characters. Today I am going to present to you Sydnie's theme which is brought to you by Paramore. The title of the song is CrushCrushCrush. Enjoy Sydnie's theme.
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    They Video no longer exists on Youtube, they got found out. the chapter was okay. but I wanted ALOT more festival than was provided. to be perfectly honest the battles are boring I'm just glad they're only two-on-two. thats not any fault of your own btw, thats just my personal preference. I prefer dialogue and humor and more literary elements. pokemon battles don't cut it for me on action any more. but I must say you certainly are good at describing them. btw don't butt-rape me people, this is my personal opinion. I in no way am saying that SL's battle scenes are verifiably boring. please please, give me a decent period of festivities...but still write your story how you want. other thgan the length of the festival poart I have no qualms with the chapter good work.


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    Quote Originally Posted by ilocar View Post
    They Video no longer exists on Youtube, they got found out.
    Yeah I figured that out when I tried to listen to it yesterday.


    but I wanted ALOT more festival than was provided. to be perfectly honest the battles are boring I'm just glad they're only two-on-two.
    Well the semi-finals are three on three and the finals are four on four so I don't know how that's going to sit with you.

    thats not any fault of your own btw, thats just my personal preference. I prefer dialogue and humor and more literary elements. pokemon battles don't cut it for me on action any more.
    I follow this kind of pattern. In the beginning there weren't that many battles as I tried to establish the setting and characters first. Then there will be a point where there are many battles, such as now. Then it starts to settle down again with little to no battles.

    please please, give me a decent period of festivities...but still write your story how you want. other thgan the length of the festival poart I have no qualms with the chapter good work.
    Oh I plan to give that to you. I planned for the festivities to run their full course after the tournament. But we all know Jyharri doesn't like fun as much as others Writing about that is going to be a blast.

    With this post I bring you the second theme. Remember Brandon? The average battler, shy around females, got sent to the headmistress's office with Jyharri? Well I bring you his theme. The song is Blurry brought to you by Puddle of Mudd. Enjoy Brandon's theme
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    Sorry for the double post but there is a good reason as to why I double posted. I have brought the newest chapter of Dedication Through Light and Darkness! In this chapter the dorm tournament finally concludes. Who will get that coveted Pokemon egg? Sydnie? Chad? Jyharri? Brandon? I know the answer, but you'll have to read to find out. One last thing; this chapter is forty pages long. I'll be making four posts so your eyes don't begin to hurt. Here is the first part. Now enjoi!

    Dedication Through Light and Darkness

    Chapter 17: Winding Down! It Comes to an End!

    “Let’s get on with this tournament folks,” said Tom. “It’s time to start the semi-final round!”

    After a short break, the spectators started to return to the stands. The four remaining trainers sat on a bench on the side of the field, awaiting the match-ups. When the stands had been filled, the official dressed in black crossed the field, approaching the competitors.

    “For time’s sake we have chosen the matches ahead of time,” said the official once he reached the trainers. “The first match is Sydnie Lake versus Jyharri Ahmed.”

    Sydnie flinched a little bit. The moment that Damien and Kelly were talking about could be now. She might have to destroy him in front of all these people. Jyharri smirked as he remembered how he beat Sydnie a couple of months prior. Jyharri entered the field, tapping the tops of his Pokéballs, trying to decide which one he should use. A smile grew on his face as his hand rested on one of the Pokéballs. Sydnie trotted to the opposite side of the field that Jyharri was on, looking at her Pokéballs. Nodding as she chose one, Sydnie enlarged the ball, Jyharri doing the same.

    “This match will be a three on three,” announced the referee. “Substitutions are not allowed. If a trainer switches out their Pokémon, that Pokémon will be counted as a loss. Match, begin!”

    “Eevee, standby for battle,” yelled Jyharri.

    “Espeon, let’s dazzle them,” said Sydnie as she tossed her Pokéball.

    Just like their match a few months ago, Eevee and Espeon were staring each other down. Eevee began to growl while Espeon just swung her tail to and fro.

    “It’s a battle between evolutions,” said Tom. “The first battle is Eevee versus Espeon!”

    “Eevee, let’s start this with Iron Tail,” said Jyharri.

    Eevee’s tail began to glow as she darted towards Espeon. Espeon stood on all fours, watching Eevee carefully. As Eevee neared the Psychic type, she jumped in the air, starting to perform somersaults before dropping down towards Espeon tail first. Sydnie yelled something inaudible to Jyharri. Espeon rolled to the side, her eyes glowing when she stood again. A blue aura surrounded Eevee, just as it had in their last battle. Slowly rising in the air Eevee began to panic.

    “Stay calm Eevee,” Jyharri told her. “Espeon is using Psychic. Before she throws you into the ground, use Protect.”

    Just like Jyharri anticipated Espeon looked down at the ground, Eevee about to be thrown in the same direction. Just before the Normal type smashed into the ground a light green sphere surrounded her body. The sphere hit the ground, protecting Eevee from any further damage. The sphere, along with the aura, disappeared from Eevee’s body.

    “Go for a Shadow Ball,” shouted Jyharri.

    The black energy began to gather in Eevee’s mouth, forming the usual sphere. As it began charging Eevee ran around Espeon, encircling it. Espeon tried to keep her eyes on Eevee, but she began to become dizzy. When the sphere reached sufficient size it launched from Eevee’s mouth.

    “Try to dodge it,” Sydnie shouted.

    Espeon would attempt to dodge the attack, but the problem was she saw three different balls. Deciding to guess which one was real, Espeon leapt to the side. Eevee began to smirk as the ball of black energy smacked into Espeon’s side. Espeon cringed as she slid back the way she came.

    “Espeon, use Psybeam,” Sydnie shouted.

    Two multi colored beams shot out of Espeon’s eyes. The beams weren’t straight like a Hyper Beam attack. They became jagged as they rocketed towards Eevee. The Normal type was in the process of sliding back to Jyharri when she noticed the beams heading towards her.

    “No time to dodge,” Jyharri observed. “Eevee, use Protect!”

    Once again the green sphere appeared around Eevee. The beams collided into the sphere, a small explosion being created. A loud bang was heard as the energies connected, a small dust cloud covering the middle of the field.

    “Eevee, hit that Espeon with a Quick Attack,” Jyharri told her.

    Eevee nodded and dashed into the dust cloud. Espeon closed her eyes, trying to find Eevee by the vibrations made in the ground. Suddenly, the vibrations in the ground became faster and whatever was causing it was getting closer to Espeon. Espeon’s eyes flew open, Eevee about ten centimeters away from her face. Eevee tackled Espeon down, the force pushing the Psychic type back.

    “Hit her with your own Quick Attack,” Sydnie said.

    Eevee crouched down low, trying to ready herself for the attack. Espeon vanished for about two seconds before reappearing in front of Eevee and knocking her back. Espeon, being the bigger of the two, stayed standing while Eevee bounced backwards before coming to a rest in front of Jyharri. Eevee stood, regaining her composure, shaking off the attack.

    “Fire another Psybeam,” shouted Sydnie.

    “Counter with Shadow Ball,” Jyharri yelled.

    As the beams fired from Espeon’s eyes, Eevee shot a ball made of black energy. The two attacks collided into each other, creating another explosion. A bigger dust cloud covered the entire field, a large gust of wind forming with it. Jyharri held onto his hat with one hand and covered his face with the other. Sydnie had to use both hands to keep her skirt down. As the dust cleared Eevee and Espeon collided into each other, trying to push the other back with their heads. Neither one was giving the other any ground. Both Pokémon had a snarl on their face.

    “Use Iron Tail,” Jyharri shouted.

    Eevee jumped into the air, Espeon running forward a little bit. Eevee’s tail began to glow as she started to somersault. Espeon looked up as Eevee began to fall downwards, tail first.

    “Counter with your own Iron Tail,” cried Sydnie.

    Before Eevee could connect, Espeon’s tail began to glow just like hers. The Psychic type swung her forked tail up towards her pre-evolution. Their tails connected, another loud bang coming from the collision. Eevee flipped over Espeon, giving her a snarl as she landed.

    “Try to calm down Eevee,” Jyharri told her. “We can win this if we just stay calm.”

    Eevee nodded and took in a deep breath. Espeon swung her tail back and forth, waiting for Eevee to try something else. The sun began to fall behind the mountains in the horizon. The sky was painted with a mixture of oranges and light pinks. The clouds also seemed to go with the sun, beginning to disappear as well.

    “Start with a Quick Attack, “started Jyharri, “then go for a Shadow Ball.”

    Eevee dashed towards Espeon, appearing as nothing but a cream colored blur. Instead of going for a head on tackle, Eevee began to run around Espeon just like she had earlier except with much more speed this time. Espeon paid no attention to Eevee, remembering what happened last time she watched Eevee run around her. As Eevee was about to fire the black energy ball, Espeon dashed at Eevee, tackling her down. The energy ball flew off into the sky, exploding in the air. Small black crystals fell down onto the field and the crowd.

    “Try another Iron Tail,” cried Sydnie.

    Espeon swung her tail downwards at the defenseless Eevee. The Normal type rolled out of the way just in time. When Espeon’s tail hit the ground, that small area cracked. Eevee ran away from Espeon, putting a little distance in between them. By now the sun had completely vanished behind the mountains, the moon shining bright and full. Eevee began to pant, her fatigue catching up with her. Espeon also began to pant, but it wasn’t as heavy as Eevee’s.

    “Eevee,” Jyharri called. “I know we can win this battle. The time we spent training the past few years have not been in vain. If we win here it will show how dedicated we are to ourselves and to each other. Let’s win this and become even stronger than before!”

    Almost as if Jyharri’s words had sparked something in Eevee, she began to glow. A ray of light from the moon shined down upon Eevee.

    “What’s this?” Tom asked himself bewildered. “It appears as if Eevee is evolving! If this evolution completes than Eevee will become an Umbreon. If that happens then Sydnie and Espeon can kiss this battle goodbye!”

    The glowing body of Eevee began to change shape and size, becoming slightly bigger. Her ears became rounded, her tail doing the same.

    “Espeon, stop Eevee from evolving,” Sydnie shrieked as she pointed towards Eevee.

    “Eevee, is evolving?” Jyharri asked himself. “If Eevee evolves now then our win will be guaranteed.”

    The crowd began to mutter, some in awe of what was taking place. Just before Eevee could completely change shape, Espeon tackled her. The light that surrounded her shattered, the tiny shards of the light flying off her body forming small crystals. Espeon stood over Eevee, a confident smile on her face. Eevee quickly charged and fired an energy ball made of black energy into Espeon’s face. The Psychic type had no time to react. The ball hit her in the face, forcing her to flip off Eevee and back to her trainer. Espeon hit the ground with a loud thud. Eevee slowly stood, her legs shaking.

    “Eevee, can you continue?” Jyharri asked his Pokémon. Eevee nodded, giving him a smile. Jyharri flashed a smile as well. “We’ve got to end it fast. Try another Shadow Ball.”

    Eevee charged up more black energy, the energy forming another sphere. The ball shot out of Eevee’s mouth, heading directly for the Psychic type. Espeon struggled to get up and dodge, but she fell back down. Just before the ball hit Espeon, it vanished. Eevee’s legs began to tremble even more. Falling to one leg, Eevee was rendered defenseless once more. Espeon also had trouble staying on her feet as she was now on her side breathing heavily.

    This next attack, Jyharri began to think; will end it, Sydnie finished.

    Both Pokémon stood, panting harder than before. The two Pokémon stared each other down as if trying to make them faint with a look.

    “Eevee, we can win this here and now,” shouted Jyharri.

    “Time to prove whose better Espeon,” Sydnie yelled.

    “Use Quick Attack!” the trainers shouted in unison.

    The two Pokémon dashed towards each other with incredible speed. They saw that if they continued running they would collide into each other, but neither one was going to give up. Eevee jumped as they neared each other. The crowd gasped as the two collided into each other again, but only one Pokémon fell.

    “Eevee is unable to battle,” the referee announced.

    Espeon stood above her opponent as the victor. She smiled before falling to the ground herself. The referee looked Espeon over before raising his other flag as well.

    “Espeon is unable to battle! The result is a double knockout.”

    “What a battle folks,” said Tom as both trainers recalled their Pokémon. “Despite being the pre evolution to Espeon, Eevee put up a good fight. Eevee fought hard enough to make Espeon faint in the end as well, resulting in a double knockout. Both trainers have two Pokémon remaining.”

    “Milotic, time to dazzle them,” said Sydnie, throwing another Pokéball.

    Jyharri smirked as Milotic appeared on the field. He grabbed a Pokéball off his belt and enlarged it, a confident smile on his face.

    “Charizard, stand by for battle!”

    As Charizard appeared on the field, the crowd began to mutter. Everyone knew that Water types had an advantage against Fire types.

    “Hey moron,” yelled someone from the crowd. “You picked the wrong Pokémon. Charizard is a Fire type which is weak against Milotic, a Water type. Looks like you’re going to lose.”

    Jyharri focused his eyes on him, trying to concentrate on his body heat. After using his new eyes the day before he noticed everyone had a different colored heat coming off their bodies. His was dark yellow while the guy that had yelled at him had a shade of green.

    “With my Charizard type doesn’t matter,” Jyharri told him. “First he’ll demonstrate it here and then he’ll show you first hand.”

    The crowd let out a loud “Ooooooh.” The guy started to turn red before leaving the stands.

    “Milotic, use Hydro Pump,” Sydnie said.

    A large jet of water shot out of Milotic’s mouth, aimed directly at Charizard. Charizard scoffed before flying over it.

    “Charizard, use Slash,” Jyharri told him.

    Charizard flew towards Milotic in a zig zag fashion, attempting to confuse her. He swung his claws at Milotic, Milotic slightly moving to the side, dodging the attack.

    “Now use Aqua Tail,” Sydnie yelled.

    Water began to spiral around Milotic’s tail. The Water type swung her tail towards Charizard, the Fire type flying even higher, dodging the attack. Charizard then floated down to the ground, beginning to swing his claws at Milotic once more. Milotic gracefully moved her body, dodging all of the attacks.

    “Switch up to Flamethrower,” commanded Jyharri.

    Charizard flapped his wings to push him away from Milotic. Taking in a deep breath, Charizard expelled a giant flame. The flame streamed its way towards Milotic. Not expecting a sudden change in attack, the Water type didn’t have time to react. Milotic became engulfed in flames, the fire doing minimal damage.

    “Milotic, use Aqua Ring,” Sydnie quickly said.

    The three water rings appeared around Milotic, extinguishing the flame and healing her a little. A small amount of steam was produced, blocking Milotic’s vision somewhat.

    “Charizard, use Focus Punch,” said Jyharri as he punched the air.

    Charizard slowly ran towards Milotic his right fist glowing. From Milotic’s eyes, all that could be seen through the steam was a large shadow. Punching through the steam, Charizard’s fist connected with Milotic’s face. The Tender Pokémon was knocked to the ground, both trainer and Pokémon surprised.

    “Now use another Flamethrower,” yelled Jyharri, not giving Milotic time to breathe.

    Once again Milotic was covered in flames. The water rings did not appear this time.

    “Finish it with Blast Burn,” Jyharri said confidently.

    Charizard started to rise into the sky, taking in a large breath. As soon as he was at a sufficient height, he blew out a large fireball. The fireball rocketed down towards Milotic, flames coming off the sides.

    “Milotic, hurry and use Water Pulse,” Sydnie yelled.

    Milotic shot out a water ball up at the large fireball in hopes of dousing the flames. When the two attacks collided a large amount of steam covered the field. Milotic let her guard down a little, thinking the attack was done. To her surprise, the fireball came through the steam, hitting her. Even though the attack was fire Milotic took a good amount of damage.

    “Tch,” was the sound that came from Jyharri. “I should have known it wouldn’t finish Milotic off, being a Fire attack and all.”

    Charizard snorted, agreeing with his trainer. Milotic’s movements became slow while her breathing became heavy. Sydnie bit her lip as she saw her first Pokémon become sluggish.

    “You don’t have to continue if you don’t want to,” Sydnie called out to Milotic. “I know you’re strong. You don’t have to prove anything.”

    Milotic looked back at her trainer and shook her head. She disagreed.

    “Seems like Milotic wants to prove to Sydnie that she can win this battle,” said Tom. “Can Milotic turn this battle around or will Charizard finish this with more than enough energy to continue?”

    Charizard expelled a large flame towards Milotic. The Tender Pokémon barely dodged it by ducking under the flames and slithering forward. Milotic tried to fire a water ball, but the ball was as small as Charizard’s fist. Charizard knocked the water ball away and flew towards Milotic. Still injured from the Blast Burn, Milotic could barely move. Charizard began to slash Milotic all over. After one last slash to the face, Milotic hit the ground.

    “Milotic is unable to battle,” the referee decided after looking Milotic over for several seconds. “The winner is Charizard!”

    Part of the crowd began to cheer wildly while the remaining people either stayed silent or jeered. Sydnie recalled Milotic while she pulled out another Pokéball, containing her last Pokéball for this match.

    “It’s up to you Bulbasaur,” Sydnie said as she tossed her last Pokéball.

    “Sydnie’s last Pokémon is a Bulbasaur,” yelled Tom. “It doesn’t look good for Sydnie. Not only does Charizard have an advantage, but he is much stronger than Bulbasaur. Can Sydnie overcome this disadvantage and come back to win this thing?”

    Bulbasaur cowered as Charizard loomed over him. Memories of their last battle were coming back. Bulbasaur remembered the pain it endured, making him cower even more. Charizard stomped towards him, a sinister grin on Charizard’s face.

    “Charizard, use Flamethrower,” said Jyharri, a grin on his face as well.

    Charizard expelled the flames near Bulbasaur, the Grass type flinching before running in the opposite direction. The flames neared the tiny green Pokémon as he darted to the left.

    [Continued]
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    [Continued]

    “Looks like Bulbasaur won’t become a barbeque,” said Tom with a slight chuckle. “Can the grass type overcome this serious disadvantage and win this battle?”

    “Try a Vine Whip,” yelled Sydnie.

    Bulbasaur ran back towards Charizard, this time from the rear. Two vines shot out from the sides of Bulbasaur’s bulb. The vines wrapped themselves around Charizard’s neck. The Fire Pokémon didn’t move as much as a few centimeters. Facing his opponent, Charizard grabbed onto Bulbasaur’s vines. The Grass type had a flashback of their first battle. A similar incident occurred where Bulbasaur was a subject of a merciless beating from Charizard because he had grabbed onto his vines.

    “Charizard, finish him with Fire Punch,” Jyharri said as he laughed.

    Just like their first battle, Charizard yanked Bulbasaur towards him. The right claw of Charizard became surrounded in fire.

    “Bulbasaur, use Sleep Powder,” Sydnie shouted.

    A purple powder shot out from the bulb on Bulbasaur’s back, covering Charizard. The Fire type started to sway back and forth.

    “Keep a tight grip on those vines Charizard,” said Jyharri.

    Bulbasaur felt Charizard’s grip tighten around his vines. Now Bulbasaur couldn’t escape. A large shadow loomed over Bulbasaur. Charizard had begun to fall and Bulbasaur was right under him. As soon as Charizard landed on Bulbasaur the Grass type lost his breath. Unable to move him, Bulbasaur was stuck under Charizard until he woke up.

    “Get up Charizard,” Jyharri called loudly. “This isn’t the place for a nap.”

    Charizard remained asleep even with Jyharri calling out to him. Bulbasaur slid his way out from under the giant, breathing heavily.

    “Charge up for a Solarbeam,” said Sydnie.

    Light began to gather in Bulbasaur’s bulb, forming a sphere. Charizard finally regained consciousness, surprised when he saw Bulbasaur about to fire a large beam.

    “Counter with Blast Burn,” commanded Jyharri.

    Just as Charizard fired a large fireball Bulbasaur released a large beam. The two attacks collided, creating a large explosion. Once again Jyharri found himself holding onto his hat while Sydnie grabbed onto her skirt. As the field became clear again Charizard grabbed Bulbasaur and began to fly into the sky.

    “What’s going on?” Sydnie asked bewildered.

    “It’s Charizard’s Seismic Toss,” explained Jyharri. “Bulbasaur is finished.”

    After flying up for about five minutes, Charizard started to dive towards the ground, beginning to spiral. Bulbasaur let out small screams, trying to break away from Charizard, but the Fire type was too strong. Right before the two Pokémon collided into the ground, Charizard released Bulbasaur while he pulled up, flying a few centimeters above the ground. Charizard landed right in front of his trainer, giving him a thumb up. Bulbasaur squirmed a little before his movements ceased completely.

    “Bulbasaur is unable to battle,” yelled the referee. “Charizard is the winner! The victor of this match is Jyharri!”

    A good portion of the people in the stands went wild with applause and cheers as they heard the referee’s decision. Jyharri turned to face the crowd while both Charizard and Bulbasaur were recalled, taking a deep bow.

    “We have our first finalist folks,” announced Tom. “Jyharri Ahmed is going to the finals! He’ll be fighting for a precious Pokémon egg which contains a mysterious unknown Pokémon! I’ll say it again people; representing Fire Red in the final round will be Jyharri Ahmed!”

    Sydnie let out a sigh. Her fear of having to destroy Jyharri had left. As she turned to walk into the crowd a hand landed on her shoulder. She turned to see Jyharri behind her, a smile on his face.

    “It was a nice battle Sydnie,” said Jyharri. “You are a very skilled trainer.”

    “Well not as skilled as you,” Sydnie told him. Her usual milky skin tone started to turn bright pink as Jyharri chuckled. “I hope you go far.”

    “Let’s bring out the final two battlers, Chad and Brandon,” said Tom. “One of these two will be facing Jyharri in the final round.”

    As Jyharri passed Brandon and Chad he whispered a final, “Good luck,” to Brandon. The boy from Lightning Yellow simply nodded his head and smiled. The referee reminded the two that the battle would be three on three and substitutions are not allowed. The two boys pulled out their first Pokéball, neither one moving after.

    “Let the final battle of the semi-final round begin,” the referee yelled as he held up both flags.

    “Torterra, go,” Brandon yelled.

    “Gengar, give them a fright,” shouted Chad as he threw his Pokéball.

    As both Pokémon appeared on the field the crowd began to cheer loudly. The last match of the semi-final round had begun. Gengar floated above Torterra, the latter staying completely still. A huge smile on his face, Gengar began to fly towards Torterra in a zig zag fashion.

    “Gengar, use Night Shade,” Chad started.

    The Ghost Pokémon appeared in front of Torterra, shooting two multicolored beams from his eyes. The jagged beams hit Torterra in the face, barely making his head move. Gengar reappeared by Chad as Torterra shook off the damage.

    “Show them a Frenzy Plant,” commanded Brandon.

    Torterra slowly moved forward as he stomped the ground. A green aura appeared around Torterra. Three vines shot out of the ground, rocketing straight up. Reaching their peak, the vines bent towards Gengar, now flying straight at him.

    “Gengar make him regret using that move,” Chad said. “Hit him with Shadow Ball.”

    Dodging the attack easily, Gengar appeared right above Torterra. Holding his hands by his side, black energy started to gather between them. The black energy formed a sphere about as large as a beach ball. Gengar snickered as he launched the ball at Torterra. Knowing he couldn’t dodge it, Torterra remained completely still. The energy ball hit Torterra in the side, pushing him to the right a bit.

    “Try a Leaf Storm attack,” said Brandon, his voice cracking a little.

    Torterra lifted his head into the air and let out a loud cry. A whirlwind of leaves flew out of the tree on his back.

    “Dodge it Gengar,” Chad told him.

    Gengar flew forward, constantly disappearing and reappearing. Torterra let out another roar, more leaves appearing. Surprised by the roar, Gengar stopped. Leaves struck Gengar all over, pushing him back to Chad.

    “Hit him with Shadow Punch,” Chad said.

    Gengar’s right fist became surrounded in purple lightning bolts as he flew towards Torterra. A vine appeared out of Torterra’s side, swinging towards Gengar. Gengar dodged the vine, punching Torterra in the face. As the Grass type recoiled Gengar’s hand became surrounded in more purple lightning bolts as he punched Torterra again. Gengar began to punch Torterra over and over until Torterra fell to one knee.

    “Finish him with Dark Pulse,” Chad told him as he chuckled.

    A purple ball appeared in between Gengar’s hands as he started to rise above Torterra. Throwing the ball down at Torterra, it changed into purple rings, forming a blast of sorts. The blast hit Torterra in the back, pushing him into the ground.

    “Torterra is unable to battle,” the referee announced. “The winner is Gengar!”

    The crowd roared with cheers as Brandon recalled Torterra. A serious look took over Brandon’s face as he pulled out another Pokéball.

    “Wartortle, let’s go,” yelled Brandon as he tossed his Pokéball onto the gravel.

    Brandon’s newly evolved Wartortle emerged from his Pokéball with a serious look on his face. Gengar floated above Wartortle, circling him carefully. Wartortle fired a jet of water from his mouth towards Gengar, the attack missing completely.

    “Gengar, show him Shadow Punch,” Chad said.

    Just like before, Gengar’s fist became surrounded in purple lightning. The Ghost type flew down towards Wartortle, throwing a punch at him. Wartortle side stepped his opponent, easily dodging the attack. Gengar threw another punch, this one hitting Wartortle in the side. The Water type flinched, holding his side as he staggered.

    “Wartortle, spray him with Water Gun,” yelled Brandon.

    The same jet of water Wartortle shot out from his mouth from before expelled out, hitting Gengar in the face. Gengar flew higher into the air to avoid the rest of the water.

    “Thanks for cleaning Gengar for me,” said Chad. “Now use Shadow Ball.”

    After shaking off the water, Gengar began to focus black energy into a ball form. Once the ball had enough energy, Gengar launched the ball at Wartortle. The energy ball whizzed through the air like a curveball. Not knowing which way to dodge, Wartortle was hit.

    “Continue with Dark Pulse,” Chad yelled.

    The purple rings that Gengar shot out bombarded Wartortle one after the other. Chad yelled another command that Brandon could not hear. Gengar started to rise into the air, a strange ball of light blue energy between his hands. Wartortle attempted to run out of the way, but as soon as he moved his legs gave out. Gengar fired the ball, a huge smile on his face. Right before the ball hit Wartortle’s eyes grew big. He knew this was the last attack.

    “Wartortle is unable to battle,” said the referee. “The winner is Gengar!”

    Chad bowed to the crowd as Brandon recalled his Wartortle. The crowd went crazy once more.

    “That’s two in a row for Gengar,” announced Tom. “Will Gengar sweep Brandon’s entire team?”

    Pulling out his last Pokéball, Brandon seemed angry. He tossed the ball with all his might. As it hit the ground, it broke open, releasing the all too familiar white light. The white light materialized into a dog like Pokémon with short black fur. Its red underbelly matched its red snout. The creature growled at Gengar, instantly knowing he was the reason some of his companions were hurt. Even though the creature bared its fangs, Gengar wasn’t threatened at all.

    “Houndour, use Flamethrower,” yelled Brandon, his voice cracking even more.

    The dog known as Houndour expelled a stream of flames in Gengar’s direction. Gengar floated above the flames, laughing as he came down towards the ground. Houndour growled at Gengar once more before dashing towards him.

    “Houndour, don’t get close to him!” Brandon shouted.

    Even though Brandon told him not to, Houndour still dashed towards Gengar. Gengar began to laugh even more as the light blue ball appeared in his hands. Houndour ignored the imminent danger and leapt at the Ghost. Gengar shot the blue energy ball into Houndour’s face, a squeal coming from the dog. The Dark type was pushed back to Brandon, taking serious damage.

    “Try a Bite attack,” suggested Brandon his voice becoming high.

    Houndour repeated what he did a few seconds ago and dashed towards Gengar; this time purple lightning bolts surrounded Gengar’s fist. Before Houndour could bite Gengar, Gengar punched Houndour in the face, knocking him to the ground.

    “Finish him with Focus Blast,” Chad said confidently.

    Gengar stood over Houndour and began to charge up the blue energy ball. Right before Gengar was about to finish the match, Houndour jumped up and bit into Gengar’s arm. The blue energy ball disappeared as Gengar let out a cry of pain.

    “Now toss him into the air,” said Brandon as he got excited.

    Houndour spun around in circles, launching Gengar high into the sky. Before he could start to fall, Houndour blasted Gengar with a stream of fire. Gengar hit the ground, barely moving.

    “Gengar is unable to battle,” the referee announced. “The winner is Houndour!”

    Part of the crowd cheered as Gengar was sucked back into his Pokéball. Chad pulled out another, a smirk on his face.

    “Congrats on knocking out Gengar,” Chad told Brandon. “You should be happy as not many people do that. Now, this next Pokémon will end it. Nidoqueen, time to give them a fright!”

    The blue Ground/Poison Pokémon emerged from her ball, a small quake rippling through the ground as she landed. Houndour eyed his opponent carefully, Nidoqueen doing the same.

    “Nidoqueen, use Earthquake,” Chad yelled.

    “Jump Houndour,” Brandon quickly shouted.

    As Nidoqueen stomped the ground with her foot, Houndour jumped as high as he could into the air. A smile appeared on Chad’s face.

    “Brick Break him into the ground,” said Chad.

    Nidoqueen predicted where Houndour would land and waited for him in that exact spot.

    “Get her away with Flamethrower,” Brandon yelled.

    Before Houndour could spit any flames, Nidoqueen launched herself above Houndour. Surprised by her jump, Houndour stopped his attack. Nidoqueen brought her fist down into Houndour’s back, slamming him into the ground, literally.

    “Finish up with Body Slam,” yelled Chad.

    Launching herself back into the air, Nidoqueen stretched herself out, the entire shadow of her body covering Houndour. The Fire type could not move as he was still recovering from the last attack. The body of Nidoqueen smashed into Houndour, leaving Houndour in the ground not moving.

    “Houndour is unable to battle,” shouted the referee. “The winner is Nidoqueen! The victor of this match is Chad!”

    “There you have it folks,” said Tom as both trainers recalled their Pokémon. “Tomorrow in the final round it will be Chad Marshall of Leaf Green against Jyharri Ahmed of Fire Red! This is sure to be an explosive match! You don’t want to miss it!”

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    “So did you and Craig ever face Tate and Liza?”

    “No, but after we graduate we’re sure that we can beat them.”

    After the match between Chad and Brandon everyone in the crowd spilled onto the campus, going through the many festival activities. Jyharri was walking with Stacy as they slowly headed towards a bench. The sun had completely vanished from the sky with the moon taking its place. It seemed as if the moon was shining directly on the table Jyharri had his eyes on. As he made a motion towards the table, Stacy smiled as she sat at the wooden picnic bench. Sitting right next to her, Jyharri moved in close, a smile on his face as well.

    “Are you sure this is the right spot?” Stacy asked him. “We’re out in the open. I mean, people might watch.”

    “Let them watch,” replied Jyharri. “Then they will know how I feel about you.”

    Jyharri brushed her dirty blonde hair behind her ear, slightly pulling her towards him. Stacy instinctively closed her eyes as Jyharri moved in close, doing the same. The two became so close they could hear each other’s breaths and feel each other’s body heat.

    “Hey, what a coincidence meeting you here,” said a voice interrupting the two.

    Both of them stopped, their eyes slowly opening. Jyharri turned to see Brandon walking towards him with an Ocean Blue girl trailing behind him. Her dark hair hid the right side of her face, coming down past her shoulders. Stacy and Jyharri broke apart, an agitated look on the former’s face.

    “What is it Brandon?” Jyharri asked a little annoyed.

    “Well since I saw you here I was thinking maybe we could hit the festival together,” Brandon replied.

    “Yeah, like a double date,” the girl piped in. “I’m Lizz by the way. I’ve heard a lot about you two.”

    “I was kind of hoping Stacy and I could spend some alone time together,” said Jyharri. “The last time we were alone was about two weeks ago.”

    “No,” Stacy said as she stood. “It’s fine with me. Maybe you can win me a Pokémon plushie or something.”

    Lizz squealed as Stacy walked back towards the stalls. Brandon shrugged at Jyharri as the three of them followed Stacy. The crowd they entered was a sea of yellow, red, blue, and green. Navigating through it was not hard as the crowds formed at stalls, never in the middle. Stacy called Jyharri over to a stall that seemed to be one of the knock the bottles down and you win games.

    “Do your Flying Pokémon have what it takes to knock all 100 bottles over in one go?” the vendor asked. “Knock them over and you can win any of these prizes for your little lady here.”

    [Continued]
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    “It has to be a Flying type?” Stacy asked with a little whine. “That’s not fair.”

    Jyharri chuckled. Scanning the prizes behind the vendor he spotted which one he wanted.

    “See that Charizard right there?” Jyharri asked as he pointed to the top. “That’s going to be yours in about three minutes.”

    “But you don’t have a Flying type,” said Stacy.

    “You forget that Charizard is both a Fire and Flying type,” Jyharri said with a little chuckle. “How much is it going to cost for me to win?”

    “Confident are we?” the vendor asked. “The first try is free. The second try costs $100.”

    Jyharri pulled out Charizard’s Pokéball, launching it up into the air. A group of people noticed the giant lizard appear in the sky. The group was then attracted to the stall where Jyharri was. Charizard landed right next to his trainer, a serious look on his face.

    “You’re not out to battle Charizard,” Jyharri told him. “It’s time to have some fun.”

    Charizard nodded his face still serious. Stacy couldn’t keep her eyes off of Jyharri as he informed Charizard about the situation. As he finished telling his Pokémon what he needed to do a smile appeared on Charizard’s face.

    “Now Charizard, use Blast Burn!” commanded Jyharri.

    The crowd that had started to form around the stall began to chuckle, thinking Jyharri was joking. As Charizard took in a deep breath their chuckling stopped. When a large fireball was expelled the people that were standing around the stall and the vendor leapt out of the way. The fireball hit the bottles dead center, incinerating a few and knocking the others over. Many people in the small crowd began to clap as the vendor handed Charizard himself as a plushie. The Fire type hugged it tightly, a smile on his face. Jyharri tapped his Pokémon on the back, his hand outstretched. A tear came to Charizard’s eye as he handed the plushie over.

    “Here you go, to remember both me and Charizard,” said Jyharri as he handed her the plushie.

    “Thank you so much,” Stacy said as she blushed. “I’ll cherish it always.”

    “Hey, at least I tried,” said Brandon’s voice.

    A crowd cleared next to Jyharri, Stacy, and Charizard revealing Lizz holding a Magikarp doll. Brandon shrugged as he walked back to Jyharri.

    “The vendor claimed I was cheating at this game and all I got was this Magikarp doll,” Brandon told him. “What did you get?”

    “Only this,” replied Jyharri as he pointed to Stacy’s new Charizard plushie.

    “Why must you always one-up me?” asked Brandon. “I’ll get something amazing later. You’ll see.”

    As the night went on the two couples played a game similar to the one Jyharri had just won. One of the differences was that instead of using a flying type you had to use a cute Pokémon. Brandon tried to use Wartortle, but the vendor said that the only cute one in its evolution line was Squirtle. Wartortle then began to weep for the rest of the night. Despite running into a little bad luck, Jyharri used Eevee to win Stacy a Pichu doll.

    “-and that’s why I can’t use lotion,” finished Brandon.

    “I wonder what’s taking Lizz and Stacy,” said Jyharri as he checked his PDA.

    “Stop worrying,” Brandon said as he took a sip from a soda cup. “They’re probably doing girl things in the bathroom.”

    “I knew I shouldn’t have let her go off towards that weird looking shack alone,” Jyharri angrily said to himself. “I’m going to send her a message to see what’s going on.”

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    “Lizz, hurry up,” Stacy said as she pulled herself up from a ladder.

    “Are you sure we should be here?” Lizz asked, her voice shaking as her head popped up from the floor. “I heard this place is haunted.”

    “We’ve been in here for about thirty minutes,” Stacy told her as she checked her PDA. “If it was haunted then I’m sure we would have noticed by now.”

    Suddenly, Stacy’s PDA began to vibrate. The screen illuminated instantly, making the room bright. Lizz let out a small scream.

    “What was that?” Lizz asked as she hesitantly pulled herself up.

    “I just got a message,” said Stacy as she laughed a little. “It’s from Jyharri.”

    The message read, “Hey, where are you? Are you ok?”

    “He’s just worried,” Stacy said.

    “Well we should get out of here before he needs to be worried,” Lizz squealed.

    “I’m telling you, this place is not haun-” started Stacy.

    Out of nowhere, Stacy was knocked to the ground, her head hitting the floor with great force. Lizz let out another small scream as she scurried to Stacy. Before she could ask if she was alright, something pushed Lizz against the wall. Lizz tried to scream out, but she was slowly losing consciousness. Just before she passed out a floating object appeared in front of her. The last thing she saw was a wide grin, its fangs near her face.

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    “That’s it; I’m going to check that place out.”

    Jyharri jumped off the bench, starting to walk towards the shack where Stacy and Lizz were last seen. Taking out a Pokéball, Jyharri released Zangoose from his Pokéball. The Normal type followed Jyharri closely as they entered the shack. A breeze blew over the two, sending a chill up their spines. There was no way for light to enter the shack with the windows boarded up.

    “How am I supposed to find them in this darkness?” Jyharri asked himself.

    Holding his hands out in front of him, Jyharri felt his way around the first room. As he came to an opening Zangoose went ahead of him, sniffing the ground. When Zangoose nodded Jyharri entered the next room. From what they could see, this room appeared to be a family room, adorned with couches and the like. Moving around the room like he did the last, Jyharri felt for the next opening. Jyharri and Zangoose entered the next room cautiously, noticing something similar.

    “Wait a minute,” said Jyharri. “This is the room we just left! We didn’t go back did we?”

    Zangoose shook his head. Straining his eyes, Jyharri looked around and confirmed they were in the room they just left. Jyharri put his hand to his chin and began to think. Many thoughts floated through his head, but he eventually came up with an idea.

    “Let’s see what will happen if we just run through each room,” Jyharri said.

    Agreeing with the idea, Zangoose dashed through the next doorway with Jyharri running behind him. The next room they entered seemed like a kitchen. Not knowing where he was going, Jyharri ran into the sink, stubbing his toe. Trying to ignore his pain, Jyharri hopped into the next room. Zangoose had stopped in the middle, waiting for his trainer.

    “Don’t tell me,” said Jyharri, slapping his hand to his face. “We’re back in the first room again. Well let’s try something different then.”

    Jyharri sprinted into the next room which happened to be the family room. Instead of going straight, he hung a left. Zangoose had picked up on what he had in mind. The Normal type dashed ahead of his trainer, making a sharp turn to the right. After making many twists and turns they finally ended up in an unfamiliar room.

    “We’ll never find Stacy and that girl,” said Jyharri as he panted. “If we keep this up then we’ll get lost in here. Is there any way to figure this crap out?”

    Suddenly a thought came to him. He remembered what Aeolus had told him about that fluid he gave him. “You will be able to see people’s body heat. Hide and seek will become child’s play.”

    “That’s it,” exclaimed Jyharri. “If I focus in on Stacy’s body heat then I should be able to figure out this puzzle.”

    Jyharri placed his hand over one of his eyes, starting to concentrate. His eyes suddenly changed to s bright yellow. Pulling his hand away from his eye he saw a red trail on the ground. Looking around the house he spotted a bright red spot and a diminishing spot that he couldn’t make out the color.

    “The red spot has got to be that girl,” said Jyharri. “If I follow this red trail then it will lead me right to her and Stacy. Let’s go Zangoose.”

    As he began to follow the trail, he noticed that it switched every time her entered a new room. The trail would slightly change in direction. Following it closely, Jyharri eventually came to a ladder. The red trail headed up the ladder and into what appeared to be the attic. Jyharri picked up Zangoose and slowly headed up the ladder. As he came into the attic Lizz’s body heat stuck out to him like a Psyduck in a crowd of Pikachu. Zangoose sniffed around the attic, coming upon Stacy’s unconscious body. Jyharri inspected Lizz as Zangoose barked at him.

    “Yeah, the girl is knocked out as well,” said Jyharri as he picked Lizz up, moving her over by Stacy. “Charizard and I could carry them out of here. I knew I should have wen-”

    Suddenly, Jyharri found his feet off the ground as he began to fall. Reacting quickly, Zangoose caught Jyharri on his back.

    “Thanks Zangoose,” Jyharri said with a sigh. “I could have ended up like these two. What in the world is going on here?”

    Zangoose started to bark at a purple spot on the floor. As the spot moved Zangoose followed it. The spot circled the room and eventually rested under a crate. Instead of stopping in front of the crate Zangoose smashed it effortlessly with his claws. The spot flew out of the ground to reveal that it was a sphere of sorts. Its grin made it seem maniacal, the purple gas around it complimenting its evil look. The sphere looking Pokémon bit into Zangoose’s arm with its sharp fangs. The bite seemed to have no effect on Zangoose.

    “A Gastly was causing all this trouble?” Jyharri asked out loud. “I’ll never let Stacy live this down. Zangoose that Gastly could be a great addition to our team. Let’s catch it.”

    Zangoose’s claws glowed bright as a smirk appeared on his face. The Pokémon known as Gastly quickly let go of Zangoose, but was too slow to avoid his claws. Zangoose struck Gastly where his stomach would be, sending him flying into another crate. Bouncing off, Gastly hit the floor.

    “Hit him with Shadow Claw,” ordered Jyharri.

    Gastly floated back into the air, a black ball beginning to form in his mouth. A shadow version of Zangoose’s claw engulfed his real claw. The Normal type charged Gastly as the Ghost type launched his attack. Zangoose leapt towards Gastly, the ball passing right through him. Shocked, Gastly was unable to dodge Zangoose’s attack. Zangoose slashed him in the top of the head, knocking him back down onto the ground. Jyharri pulled out a Pokéball, readying himself.

    “Let’s use one more attack,” said Jyharri. “Show him your Thunderbolt attack.”

    As Gastly started to float again Zangoose let loose a bolt of electricity. Gastly saw it coming, barely dodging it by pushing himself to the left. Out the corner of his eye, Jyharri noticed some stirring. He turned to see Lizz finally coming to.

    “W-what’s going on?” she asked still in a daze.

    “Well, look who it is,” started Jyharri, “Miss Let’s Go to That Weird Looking Shack.”

    “What are you talking about?” she asked. “My name is Lizz.”

    Jyharri slapped his hand to his face as he let out a small breath. “What happened here? Why were you knocked out?”

    “What? Zangoose you’ll have to speak up. I can’t hear you.”

    Zangoose made a face that said, “Huh?”

    “She is no help,” Jyharri said to himself. “I’ll just catch this Gastly and get these two out of here.”

    When Jyharri turned back to the battle he saw that Gastly had his tongue wrapped around Zangoose’s neck.

    “Ah!” Jyharri exclaimed. “Zangoose, how could you let that ball turn the tables on you?!”

    Gastly started to laugh at Jyharri’s question. He began laughing so much he didn’t stop. Continuing to laugh, Gastly let go of Zangoose. The Gas Pokémon fell to the floor still laughing. Jyharri look at his hand and saw the Pokéball in it. He looked back at Gastly and saw he was still laughing. Taking one more look at the Pokéball in his hand, he tossed it at Gastly. As the ball hit Gastly, it cracked open, turning the Ghost type into a red light and sucking him into the ball. When the ball began to shake Gastly’s laughter rang in Jyharri’s ears. After the third shake a light flashed in the middle as the ball made a light ping noise. When Gastly was captured his laughter finally disappeared from Jyharri’s head.

    “Great job Zangoose,” Jyharri complimented him as he picked up Gastly’s Pokéball and recalled him. “Now to see if Stacy is alright.”

    Jyharri passed Lizz, giving her a weird look, and kneeled next to Stacy. He began to gently shake her, attempting to wake her up. After a few failed attempts he got an idea.

    “I remember seeing in a lot of movies that a kiss from a guy would wake them up,” said Jyharri. “Would it work if they’re unconscious? It’s worth a shot.”

    Jyharri closed his eyes as he slowly pulled Stacy closer and moved his face closer to hers. Stacy’s face began to twitch slightly. As Jyharri inched closer, Stacy’s head suddenly jerked forward. Snot flew out of her nose, saliva out of her mouth. She had sneezed in Jyharri’s face. As he wiped his face, Stacy slowly opened her eyes.

    “Jyharri!” she exclaimed. “What are you doing here?”

    “I was worried about you,” he replied a little disgusted.

    “What’s with that face?” she asked.

    “You sneezed on me,” said Jyharri. “How about we just get out of here and get you to the nurse?”

    “I don’t need to go to the nurse,” Stacy said as she pulled herself up. “I’m fine.”

    Jyharri sighed as he stood up. “You were knocked out for who knows how long. I think you should see the nurse.”

    “If I see the nurse and they make me stay then I won’t be able to see your match tomorrow,” she said as she made a face. “All I need is some ice and a little rest. Isn’t that right Lizz?”

    “Uh, sure,” said Lizz as she walked over to the two holding her head.

    “Fine,” Jyharri decided, “but no more adventures without me. I don’t want you getting hurt.”

    “Thanks but I can handle myself,” Lizz said with a chuckle.

    “I was talking to Stacy.” Jyharri shook his head at the Ocean Blue girl. “Now let’s get back to Brandon before he gets worried. I hate it when he worries about me.”

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    “Welcome to the final round of the dorm tournament,” Tom’s voice boomed over the intercom. “Today it will be red vs green, Fire vs Leaf, first year vs third year! It’s Jyharri Ahmed vs Chad Marshall! Let’s go to referee Bryan Campbell for the official rules.”

    “This will be a four on four battle,” said the referee. “One trainer will win when they have knocked out all of the opposing trainer’s Pokémon. Substitutions are allowed only when you knock out a Pokémon. Any other substitutions will be counted as a fainted Pokémon. Let the battle begin!”

    “Nidoqueen, let’s give them a fright!” Chad exclaimed as he threw his first Pokéball onto the field.

    “Eevee, standby for battle!” Jyharri shouted as he released his Pokéball.

    “The first two Pokémon are Eevee and Nidoqueen,” announced Tom. “Neither one has a type advantage, but my money is on Nidoqueen!”

    The crowd began to murmur as Eevee appeared on the field. Most of the crowd seemed to agree with Tom. Stacy looked around her, hearing everyone saying that Jyharri’s choice was a bad one.

    “Nidoqueen, crush that Eevee with Body Slam,” started Chad.

    Nidoqueen dashed towards Eevee, the ground beginning to shake. As she neared him Nidoqueen launched herself into the air. The shadow of Nidoqueen covered Eevee as she started to fall back to the earth.

    “Send her flying with Iron Tail,” countered Jyharri.

    Just before Eevee was crushed, her tail began to glow. Eevee smacked Nidoqueen in the gut with her tail, sending her back into the air.

    “Now use Shadow Ball,” commanded Jyharri.

    As Nidoqueen fell, black energy began to gather in Eevee’s mouth. When Eevee fired it, Nidoqueen released a quick energy ball also made up of black energy.

    “Hit her with an Iron Tail,” Chad shouted.

    As Nidoqueen fell her tail began to glow. Right before Eevee was hit she jumped out of the way. Nidoqueen’s tail crushed the spot where Eevee previously was.

    “Follow up with a Double Kick attack,” said Chad.
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    Now Nidoqueen’s feet began to glow. Launching herself at Eevee, Nidoqueen flew feet first at her.

    “Jump towards Nidoqueen,” Jyharri told Eevee.

    The crowd began to murmur even more now. Why would Jyharri tell Eevee to jump at a super effective attack?

    “Has Jyharri gone nuts?” Tom asked. “If that Double Kick hits then it’s probably over for Eevee!”

    “Now use Protect,” Jyharri yelled.

    Nidoqueen threw her foot at Eevee, but Eevee already knew what to do. After slightly dodging the first and second kick a green sphere appeared around Eevee right before the two Pokémon collided. Nidoqueen slammed into the green sphere, taking quite a bit of damage.

    “Continue with Iron Tail,” Jyharri said.

    As Nidoqueen landed, Eevee flipped in the air. The Normal type slammed her tail into Nidoqueen’s gut. Jumping back, Eevee watched as Nidoqueen stood up as if it had taken no damage.

    “I’ll admit that I haven’t had Nidoqueen very long,” said Chad, “but she is holding out a lot more than I thought she would. Nidoqueen show them Hyper Beam.”

    An orange sphere appeared in Nidoqueen’s mouth as she charged towards Eevee.

    “Eevee, use Quick Attack to surprise her,” said Jyharri.

    Eevee dashed at Nidoqueen, being seen only as a cream colored blur. Nidoqueen was expecting a fast moving attack and prepared for it. Right before she was hit, Nidoqueen grabbed Eevee. The Drill Pokémon slammed her into the ground, still charging up the ball. Eevee tried to escape, but Nidoqueen’s grip was too great.

    “Eevee use Protect!” shouted Jyharri.

    “Too late!” exclaimed Chad.

    Just before the green sphere appeared, Nidoqueen fired a beam into Eevee’s face. Sure of victory, Nidoqueen turned her back on Eevee and began to walk away. Eevee slowly stood up, her body trembling.

    “Eevee!” cried Jyharri.

    A fierce look appeared in Eevee’s eye as she looked at Nidoqueen. She began to walk towards, almost falling.

    “Eevee, a frontal attack won’t work and hitting from behind is cheap,” Jyharri told her. “The only way we can beat Nidoqueen is from below!”

    Eevee knew what he was talking about. She nodded her head and began to burrow into the ground. Surprised, Nidoqueen did an about face, but all she saw was Jyharri. Eevee had disappeared.

    “She’s going to come up from the ground,” Chad informed his Pokémon. “Be on your guard.”

    Suddenly, the ground beneath Nidoqueen began to crumble. Not wanting to be hit by a super effective attack, Nidoqueen began to punch the ground. The earth crumbled in, trapping Nidoqueen. Eevee popped out of the ground right in front of Nidoqueen, a black energy ball fully formed in her mouth. The Normal type fired the ball, hitting Nidoqueen in the face.

    “Follow up with an Iron Tail,” Jyharri commanded.

    Flipping through the air, Eevee slammed her glowing tail onto Nidoqueen’s head. Nidoqueen began to thrash about, trying to escape her earth prison. After thrashing for a little the ground broke around Nidoqueen. As the Ground type emerged from the ground Eevee burrowed back into it. Nidoqueen looked around just as she had before, waiting for Eevee to pop out.

    “It’s probably going to be the same tactic,” Chad told Nidoqueen.

    When the ground began to crumble beneath Nidoqueen, she ignored it. If she had punched it then she would end up in the same position as last time, or so she thought. Instead of being a diversion Eevee popped up, knocking Nidoqueen back onto the ground. Nidoqueen stirred for a little before finally staying still.

    “Nidoqueen is unable to battle,” announced the referee as both trainers recalled their Pokémon. “Eevee is the winner!”

    Surprised at first, the crowd stayed silent. Stacy was among one of the first people to start cheering. After seeing a small group to begin cheering, some more people cheered.

    “Gengar let’s give them a fright!” Chad shouted as he threw his Pokéball.

    “Charizard, standby for battle!” yelled Jyharri, also throwing his Pokéball as well.

    “The second battle shall be Gengar vs Charizard!” Tom announced.

    “Charizard use Flamethrower,” Jyharri started.

    Charizard lifted into the air so he was level with Gengar. Charizard took in a breath, expelling a stream of fire. Gengar took the attack, a smile still on his face as the flames vanished.

    “Use Shadow Ball Gengar,” said Chad.

    After charging up the black energy, Gengar fired a ball at Charizard. Before it got close Charizard hit it with a flame, sending it back. Surprised, Gengar barely blocked the returned energy ball.

    “Hit him with Fire Blast,” shouted Jyharri.

    Breathing in again, Charizard expelled a giant flame kanji Dai (大). The flame was too big for Gengar to dodge. Slamming into Gengar, the flame did maximum damage, knocking him to the ground.

    “Gengar must still be injured from battling yesterday,” Chad said to himself. “Gengar try to use Focus Blast.”

    Gengar shakily stood up, his smile now a frown. When he began to charge up the blue energy, a flame appeared around him, inflicting more damage.

    “What a turn of events,” exclaimed Tom. “Gengar was burned by Charizard’s Fire Blast attack. If Gengar doesn’t end it fast then he will be in serious pain!”

    Gengar fell to one knee, his whole body shaking. Charizard slowly lowered down on to the ground, watching as Gengar shook.

    “Gengar try to use Night Shade,” cried Chad.

    Gengar forced himself to his feet, his body still somewhat shaking. Two small, jagged beams shot out of Gengar’s eyes, heading for Charizard. The beams hit the Fire type in the stomach, making him flinch at most. Jyharri began to laugh a horrible laugh. Malice appeared in Jyharri’s bright yellow eyes. He saw that Gengar’s body heat was diminishing. He knew it meant Gengar was almost finished.

    “Charizard, finish Gengar off with Blast Burn,” commanded Jyharri.

    Charizard sensed the malignance in his trainer’s voice and hesitated. Gengar was already hurt enough from yesterday. Charizard didn’t want to put him in critical condition.

    “Did you hear me Charizard?” Jyharri asked him loudly. “I said finish him off with Blast Burn!”

    Charizard reluctantly released the large fireball upon Gengar. The Ghost type tried to dodge, but the flames appeared around him again. After the flames from his burn vanished, Gengar was hit with the giant fireball. As the flames began to disappear Gengar was seen on the ground motionless.

    “Gengar is unable to battle,” said the referee. “The winner is Charizard.”

    Jyharri smiled as he recalled Charizard. The crowd remained silent when Gengar was recalled. After a few seconds one person began clapping in the crowd. Jyharri looked around the crowd to see who was clapping when he came upon a man in white. It was Aeolus.

    “Chad has two remaining Pokémon,” said Tom, a little shocked. “Can Jyharri knock out his entire team without one of his Pokémon fainting?”

    “Why did you do that?” Chad asked Jyharri angrily as he pulled out another Pokéball.

    “I had to knock Gengar out,” Jyharri said coolly. “That’s how you win right?”

    “You could have let me recall Gengar and it would still count as a knockout,” Chad said getting even angrier. “What you did was unforgiveable! I’ll make sure you don’t win! I’ll finish you with this next Pokémon!”

    Chad released the Pokéball in his hand, the ball cracking open. The light that flew out hit the ground materializing into what appeared to be a butterfly. Its wings stretched out about a meter or so. It started to fly into the air, its small body floating easily.

    “That’s it?” Jyharri asked as he started to laugh hysterically. “You’re going to beat me with a puny little bug?”

    A person in the crowd also began to laugh as well. Soon a good portion of the crowd was laughing.

    “Butterfree is a good Pokémon,” Chad said as his cheeks turned pink.

    “Ref is it against the rules to send out the Pokémon you just recalled?” Jyharri asked as he was calming down.

    “No it is not,” the referee said, suppressing a laugh himself.

    Jyharri let Charizard back out, the Fire type looking around for his opponent. Jyharri pointed out that the butterfly was his opponent and Charizard looked at him like he was crazy.

    “Start with a Flamethrower,” said Jyharri.

    Charizard sighed and released a stream of fire identical to the one he used against Gengar. Butterfree quickly dodged the attack, letting out a small sigh of relief.

    “Put him to sleep with Sleep Powder,” shouted Chad.

    Butterfree flew over Charizard releasing a purple powder. Charizard remembered when Bulbasaur used the same attack. Not wanting to live through it again Charizard used his wings to blow the powder away from him and back onto Butterfree.

    “Don’t breathe it in Butterfree,” Chad warned her.

    Holding her breath, Butterfree flew out of the mist of the purple powder. Charizard followed her, his right fist ablaze. Butterfree knew that this was a fire attack. Flying as fast as she could, Butterfree tried to escape Charizard, but Charizard was slightly faster. The Fire type punched Butterfree in the back, slamming her into the ground.

    “Now end it with Flamethrower,” Jyharri said.

    Charizard spit out a small flame onto Butterfree, setting her on fire. Chad slapped his hand to his face as he held up Butterfree’s Pokéball.

    “Butterfree, return,” Chad said a little disappointed.

    “Illegal substitution,” said the referee. “Charizard is the winner.”

    “Chad, what happened with all that skill from your previous battle?” Jyharri asked. “This can’t be your full strength.”

    “Well it is,” Chad replied.

    “You’re not a good liar Chad,” said Jyharri. “Before my battle with Drake a while ago I researched him. It said he had one loss. I had to look up who beat him and found something very interesting. Everyone said it was you and the computer said the same thing.

    “If I can barely knock out one of his Pokémon how am I going to knock all of yours out without one of mine fainting? It makes no sense.”

    “If you can beat me then I’ll explain everything to you,” Chad said with a smirk. “I still won’t forgive you for what you did to Gengar though. Now Clefable, let’s give them a fright!”

    From Chad’s Pokéball emerged a stocky pink creature. The wings located on its back were a darker pink than it, it being a very light pink. The absence of fingernails made it seem even less dangerous.

    “So you have Clefable and Butterfree,” Jyharri pointed out. “That’s two girly and weak Pokémon you own.”

    “Don’t underestimate Clefable,” Chad warned him. “Her Metronome can be any attack. Show him Clefable.”

    Clefable smiled and began to wave her pointed hands back and forth. Charizard watched the Normal type intently, waiting to see what attack it would be. After several waves Clefable stopped.

    “OH YEAH,” Chad shouted. “HERE WE GO! LET HIM HAVE IT CLEFABLE!”

    Instead of releasing an attack, Clefable began flopping up and down on the ground. Charizard gave her a questioning look at first. Then Charizard, along with everyone else except Chad, started laughing hysterically.

    “Oh no,” said Jyharri. “Charizard watch out for that Splash attack.”

    Chad began to turn red as everyone continued to laugh. “ALL RIGHT!” he yelled. “It’s not that funny.”

    Everyone instantly shut up when Chad yelled. “Geez,” said Jyharri, “fun sucker. Charizard use Flamethrower.”

    Charizard expelled yet another stream of fire. Just as the flames were about to hit, Clefable splashed out of the way. Surprised, Charizard fired another flame. This time Clefable was splashing in one spot. The flames struck Clefable in the side.

    “Try another Metronome,” Chad called.

    Clefable stood with a smile still on her face. After waving her hands a few times a jagged blue beam shot out. The attack didn’t seem to have great accuracy as it hit the ground in front of Charizard. The ground froze the instant the beam touched it.

    “Still no luck,” Chad said.

    “Charizard use Wing Attack,” Jyharri ordered.

    Jumping into the air, Charizard flew straight towards Clefable with his wings glowing. Like a deer in headlights, Clefable remained completely still. When Clefable was struck by Charizard’s wings, he grabbed on to her, taking her up into the sky. Just like he did to Bulbasaur, Charizard began to fly directly at the ground, starting to spiral when he was halfway there. Right before they hit the ground Charizard launched Clefable into the ground as he redirected himself to fly straight.

    “Oh no,” Chad muttered as he slapped his hand to his head.

    “Clefable looks so peaceful,” said Jyharri.

    Clefable lay on the ground, still smiling and waving her arms.

    “Clefable is unable to battle,” the referee said. “Charizard is the winner. The winner of this match and the dorm tournament is Jyharri Ahmed!”

    As the trainers recalled their Pokémon the crowd erupted in applause and cheers. Stacy ran down to the field and straight to Jyharri. Once she reached him, she jumped on him. Surprised by the jump, Jyharri barely caught her. Stacy gave Jyharri a great big smile. Jyharri flashed a smile too before she pulled him close, kissing him on the lips. Instinctively Jyharri wrapped his arms around her, holding her close. A hand clasped onto Jyharri’s shoulder. Breaking away from Stacy, Jyharri saw Chad standing behind him, a big smile on his face.

    “Congratulations Little Red,” Chad congratulated him.

    Confetti of the four dorms colors shot out of cannons on the sides of the stands showering everyone. Tom Jones started to say something but he was drowned out by the cheers of the crowd and the sound of the cannons firing. The official from the previous days of the tournament walked out onto the field with a man dressed in all black. In the official’s hands was the Pokémon egg, blue and black all over.

    “For winning the dorm tournament,” the official said into a microphone, “we present to you this Pokémon egg. The egg was donated to us by Mr. Dimitrios!”

    Jyharri shook hands with the man known as Dimitrios and then the official. After shaking hands, the official handed him the blue and black Pokémon egg while another official brought out a container. After putting the egg into the container, Jyharri held it above his head towards the crowd with the crowd cheering even more.

    “Great job,” Stacy shouted.

    As thanks Jyharri kissed Stacy again, holding it for a few seconds. As the crowd spilled onto the field the noise had died down.

    “That’s it folks,” said Tom. “Jyharri Ahmed has won the dorm tournament. He has represented Fire Red well. He has won the egg and he has a girlfriend to boot. What is in the egg you ask? Not even I know that. Until next time Academy, this is Tom Jones signing out.”
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    I tried to make that as short as I could but it came out to forty pages. If someparts seemed rushed then I am sorry. Anyway, continuing on with the themes here is Jyharri's theme. It was hard to find a theme for him. I wanted to capture the egotisical, gullible Jyharri we all know and love in one song. Instead I found a song that covers his good side (if he has one XD). This song is brought to you by Bruce Faulconer and it is titled Goku's Super Saiyan 3 Ascension theme. Enjoy Jyharri's theme. Also I have themes for Jyharri's victory and Blaziken's Sky Uppercut. These songs are from Toshiro Masuda. They are titled Victory and I'll Do It Right respectively. Enjoy those as well.
    Credit goes to MagicMochi. Check out their shop.

    Quote Originally Posted by Sidewinder
    While it is very reminiscent of a lot of journey trainer fics, it held my attention. It stands out among a lot of the other fics I've read lately and I'm excited to continue the story.

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