Hi, guys, I was wondering if I could get some feedback on the fanfiction idea I'm working on. I always thought it would be interesting to have a Magikarp as a starter Pokemon, especially since it's well, a Magikarp. Also, I've always been a fan of the underdog and so, the idea of a person who knows zilch about Pokemon training having to become one has it's appeal too. It's probably not that original, but I was wondering what you guys think off this summary:
Teresa Wilkins never wanted to be a Pokémon trainer. To her, it’s overrated, dangerous, and detrimental to one’s sanity. After all, who could expect a human (like pathetic, all-too-vulnerable Teresa) to be able to control creatures that are practically death incarnate? It doesn’t help that her estranged father—an ex-trainer who couldn’t quite make it—expects her to be a Pokémon champion, when all Teresa wants to do is concentrate on her studies.
To get her dad off her back, Teresa buys the most feeble, least time-consuming Pokémon she can think of—a Magikarp. Much to her amazement, Teresa finds she enjoys its company, and for the first time in her life, Teresa has a friend.
However, Teresa hears that her father has gone missing, with no clues to his whereabouts whatsoever. Then things start getting worse for her, much worse. Goons come skulking around her boarding school campus. Threatening messages arrive on her personal computer and answering machine, demanding the research her father apparently has.
Whatever legacy Ralph Wilkins left behind, Teresa is beginning to feel the full effects of it.
An attack on her person makes Teresa realize that she’ll have to find her dad herself, if she ever wants to have a normal life. The police have already given up, much to her dismay. With the excuse of wanting to go on a Pokémon journey with her Magikarp, Teresa takes off, knowing that she’ll be the one to find her dad. It’s not like she will actually have to gain Gym badges, or battle with other trainers; Teresa expects that a loner like herself will gain little attention.
How wrong she is.
Criminal syndicates, conspiracies both old and new, troublesome trainers that won’t take no for an answer; Teresa encounters them all. And that’s not even mentioning the eccentric Pokémon she and Magikarp meet along the way. Teresa just knew that Pokémon journeys are way more trouble than they’re worth.
So yeah, it's definitely a work in progress ^^;. I was wondering if you guys could help me with some of the rough spots I've been having.
1.) Is there any tips you can give for forming my own region--like what you would like to see in Towns/Cities and in Gym Leaders?
2.)From what you know about Teresa, is she likable? I have a tendency to make up protagonists who tend to annoy people.
3.)When it comes to the as-of-now-unnamed Magikarp, would it be feasible for him to be able to win battles against other Pokemon if most of his battles are against weaker Pokemon, that happen to take place in the water. (For sure I know that this story will take place on a peninsula with surrounding islands--so there'll be definiteley a lot of water .)
If anyone has feedback, I'll be super happy to accept it! Sorry if I made this too long.