This is very well-done. The sprites are used very effectively, as are the backgrounds. You display impeccable management of textboxes and panel layouts, especially for a beginner. Your spelling and grammar are excellent, which is rare for beginners. And your writing ability seems to be strong, leading us in an interesting direction. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Keep up the good work!
For various reasons, (not least because I've grown tired of this username), I've moved my operations over to other websites. If you're interested in following my adventures as I explore and subvert the many worlds of Nintendo through prose, look for me on Archive of Our Own, Bulbagarden, or OverClocked ReMix as "Daidalos."
And if you're a fan or a comic-maker from the old days, thanks for more than five unforgettable years of community, comics, and creativity. And thanks for remembering.