Skipping stones ( advance + a hint of palletshipping ) Rated T

[Waterpokes]

Thanks for cookie! *Eats cookie*
Anyway, major shipping. Stories like this, I have never seen stories like this were Advanceshipping is the major ship. But as long as this goes the Advanceshipping way, it can be other major shippings.

And 1st point view from May, that is going to be interesting.

[Eon Master]

Yay awesome more shipping,I cant wait
Shall we expect some barry x dawn shipping?(Sorry I cant remember the name>.>)

I agree. More shipping+awesome comedy=Epic Win XD Note: BarryxDawn is called Twinleafshipping.

[XxMays_flowerxX]

Reviews!

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this is just to warn you before I post my next ship. and this will have MAJOR shipping!
- squeals!!! -
*squeals* OMG OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!! *cough* I mean, it's always good with lots of shippyness. I can't wait, but I will manage. Now if you excuse me, I am goona control the little girl in me now.

I know!! - jumps up and down -
The shipping in this chapter will end up slow but tords the end it'll end with a BANG!

Yay awesome more shipping,I cant wait
Shall we expect some barry x dawn shipping?(Sorry I cant remember the name>.>)

*sigh* sorry to say but Dawn and Barry will be in the next chappie... with shipping :O
YEAH!!! shipping BOYAH! - grunts - I-I mean yeah!

Thanks for cookie! *Eats cookie*
Anyway, major shipping. Stories like this, I have never seen stories like this were Advanceshipping is the major ship. But as long as this goes the Advanceshipping way, it can be other major shippings.

And 1st point view from May, that is going to be interesting.

Me too! thats why I made a stand! WE SHAW'LL MAKE THIS HAPPEN!!!
:] but yes! May's point of veiw also will open up to ash's past too! so that will be pretty cool! and you deserve that cookie! good work lad!

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Originally Posted by BlazeFusion76 View Post
Yay awesome more shipping,I cant wait
Shall we expect some barry x dawn shipping?(Sorry I cant remember the name>.>)
I agree. More shipping+awesome comedy=Epic Win XD Note: BarryxDawn is called Twinleafshipping.

Thanks! I've been wondering what it was called hehe... and yes! SHIPPING!!! WOWOWOW!!!!!

[BlazeFusion76]

A Bang?0.0
Shouldve been more descriptive there,NOW I WANT NEXT CHAPPIE NOW!Lol,joking take your time although that comment has gotten me quite interested...
YOU RULE!
EDIT:Please exscuse me I double posted on such an a amazing thread >.>

[XxMays_flowerxX]

YOUR WISH IS MY COMMAND!!! XD

Ash Satoshi: Junior age:17
May Hakura: Junior age: 17
Ryan Stone: Senior age: 19

May's POV
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Chapter 5: Trouble

I thought today would have been a little frightening because I was the ‘fresh meat’ in the school, but really everything has been going along fine. The teachers were very helpful and kind to me, showing where my classes were when I need assistant. Students here were also quite friendly here too... kind of. I particularly liked that boy in chemistry, he was so kind and helpful.

Ash Satoshi, he was fairly tall for a junior, and he had those type of eye’s that were pure. They reminded me of a man I met in Hoenn, but the person had silky, sliver eye’s, not Ash’s bright hazel eye’s. I didn’t know what it might have been, maybe the depth in his orbs, that reflected off his personality. I don’t know, but the first time my eyes meet with his, the man popped in my head.

My fingers tapped on the surface of the desk, my eye’s watched them go up and down continuously, as my head laid on top of my arm,. I sometimes peeped over my shoulder to read the time, only to find myself sigh in disappointment. I couldn’t do anything because I had to get a permission sheet signed by my parents, in order to work on the computers. ( found out that I actually had computer lab fifth period, other then art ) I didn’t have anything to do, and there really was nothing around for me to keep me busy. So I just waited, listening to ticks of the clock.

I didn’t have luck making friends other then Ash. I didn’t understand, when I introduced myself to them they would grunt and turn away, or just plainly say ‘ they didn’t care’. That didn’t happen when I did that to him. Sure he was quiet after I introduced myself, but he asked me questions, and even helped me when I didn’t know how to put on my own glove! The most amazing thing about him, was when I won that… what is it called, a bet? Well anyways, he didn’t get mad, or blew up on me when the crowd was chanting my name, he smiled and congratulated me.

I really wanted him to be my friend, but I didn’t know if I was able to be his. I mean, I don’t even know how to put gloves on. Who would want to be friends with me? he said that he would introduce me to his group at lunch. I grew nervous when he said that, what if they find me strange, or think I’m a freak? Uh, I’m so nervous.

My fingers ceased from their tapping, I straightened up in my chair, and decided that I needed to get out of here. I push in my chair, and headed forwards to ask to be excused for the bathroom. I twirled around, and advance over to my teacher’s desk. The rows of students glanced up at me while I passed, I scanned over at the rows of students, my teeth bit into my lip, my cheeks were flaring up in embarrassment.

Then I bumped into something hard, causing me to stumble back, “ Ah! I’m so sorry! I-" I looked up and froze; I shivered in fear.

The person in front of me starred down at me with his bloody red eye’s. They were shadowed with darkness, and something else that I couldn’t put to words. He grinned, walking around me in a complete circle. I fallowed him, curious and cautious at the same time. He wore a senior, black uniform, his hair was light brown, cut up in a choppy, skater hairstyle. Something in his eye’s screamed trouble.

The boy laughed, placing his hands on his hips, “ My, look what I bumped into. Your rather cute, what is your name?”

I backed up a little, my sight locked on him, “May. My name is May, I’m sorry for bumping into you sir.” I tried to walk around him, but he glided by me, blocking my way. I didn’t like this person, something about him doesn’t seem right.

“ What a pretty name. My name is Ryan, It’s so nice to meet you.” He laughed again and crossed his arms.
“ So where are you heading to?”

I narrowed my eyes, “ That’s nothing you should worry about.”

“ Oh, no need to be hasty…” His hand reached out to my face, lifting up a strand of my loose hair, and placing it behind my ear. I flinched when his skin touched my cheek. Did he just do that without asking!? How rude! He frowned, his eyebrows furrowed,
“What’s the matter, May? All I’m doing is being a gentlemen. Now…” He stepped one foot closer to me, hovering over my head. “ How about you and me-“

“Mr.Stone!”
he moaned, and stepped back from me, facing the man who called out to him. I stared at Ryan, watching his every movement, “ Please stop lally-gagging and go back to your station.” He glanced down at me with his piercing eye’s, and then strolled past the teacher, and down the row to his station. I sighed in relief and approached the teacher. Thank goodness for miracles.

“ Sir can I use the restroom, please?” He nodded, and shew me away with his hand. I didn’t wait for his words, I sprinted across the room- not caring if he yelled after me-, and jumped through the door.

The air merged into chill cold vibes, they hit my body like a bullet. I gasped at the quick change, and puffed heat into my cuffed hands, trying to warm them up. I needed to get out of there! One more second in there and I would have gone crazy! And that strange boy… he was so frightening.

I shook the memory out of my head, and ran on. I found the bathrooms coming up ahead, I jolted farther and faster then before. The turn was coming up fast, I leaned right and twisted my body to skid across the pavement, to point me in the right direction. When the skidding slowed, I pushed forward and leaped into the tiled room. I shuffled to the end and sat down against the wall. I huffed and panted hard from running, a bead of sweat flowed down my right temple. I wiped it away, with my palm and laid it over my forehead.

I was out of that classroom, and I only had a couple minutes to spend enjoying my free time outside. My eyelids fluttered, staring at the bars of lights on the ceiling. One more period… Then I could be back next to him. The back of my neck heated up, I curled into a ball, my arms wrapped around my legs. Why was I like this? I just met him today and all of a sudden I want to be close to him.

May something is definitely wrong with you, the mental voice noted. I shook my head slowly, taking the sentence in. There’s nothing wrong with me, I-I'm probably going through a stage. Yeah right If you call liking- I covered my ears, forcing my inside voice to mute. SHUT UP!

The heat rose a degree higher, my cheeks were blazed by the truth. This boy, he was driving me crazy, he’s the reason I’m like this. The problem would have gone away if I didn’t invite him to be my friend. I’m a magnet for trouble or something?! My eye’s fell down to the white, tiled floor. My arms fell to the sides of my hip. But… I didn’t want the problem to go away. I was addicted to the problem, I wanted to be near the problem, to laugh with it. I wanted to be Ash’s friend.

I urged to gaze into his hazel eye’s, to experience his laughter, I was addicted to his kindness. I smiled, closing my eyes. I don’t care if he brings me this trouble. As long as I’m going to be near him. I’ll be okay. Yeah, that will be my promise. No matter what, I’ll be fine as long as I see his smile.
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“Do you really have to go May?” asked my friend. Brendon carried my bag of clothes down the stairs, trailing behind me. I nodded, the reminder wasn’t a happy one. And I would remember this sad moment in my life forever. “ It sucks that you HAVE to go. Your mom was serious wasn’t she?”

I couldn’t handle the truth, it was so painful to even think about it. I jumped off the last step, and strolled through the entrance, “Yes. I-It’s true. We no longer have the money to afford this house. So were leaving to a place called Kanto.”

He snorted, “ I can’t believe this is happening. I thought you guys had a lot of money!” I blinked, surprised by the fact he thought we were actually ‘rich’. We did, we had money. But that was before when my mother grew very sick. Then all the money we had went tords her medical bills.

“ Can we change the subject please?” I didn’t like to be reminded about these things. I set down the box of valuables on the floor of our truck, Brandon placed his bag next to it. I stood there overlooking all our prize positions and stuff that was once furnished in our house.

I lived here all through my life. Born here, raised here… and now I had to leave my haven on earth to a far away place. The tears overflowed , falling down to the floor. Splash. Why! Why did they have to take away my home! Max is only still a child, and they still take our haven away! I couldn’t stand it, I can’t watch my home grow empty and silent while I stand here. It hurts…

“ May?”

I leaped out of the truck, down to the pavement on the ground. I ran around the truck, and dashed forward away from where my home would never be seen again. Brendon screamed my name behind me, but I didn’t care about that right now. My home was ripped away from me, like stealing a bottle from a baby. The end of my street was appearing ahead. Right was down an other street, Left was down to the city. I took my chances and headed for the city. If they were ripping my love away from me, then I was going down with it.

My tears blinded my sight, the black streets came out a blurry lane. My heart throbbed and ached, my legs wobbled, I felt weak. I am weak... Then my body collapsed, tumbling down to the cement. A shot of pain shocked my leg, it tingled and stung, the blood oozed out of the deep wound. The tears flowed down thicker, adding pain to my sadness. I’m so weak.

My eye’s shut, my sobs and gasp grew louder. I was in pain, take this pain away! Why did you have to give me so much pain! “ Are you okay?” My eye’s shot open, I yelped in surprise.
“ Don’t move! Your hurt pretty badly.” I stared at his eye’s. They were so elegant, peaceful, loving. They were the eye of a god. The strange man smiled, scratching the back of his head.
“ I apologize if I frightened you. Let me introduce my self” He held out his hand. “My name is John Matsubara.” His eye’s twitched, like he didn’t like the sound of his name.

I didn’t even blink, I was memorized by the silky silver of his eyes, “ May Hakura. Nice to meet you.” I gradually accepted his hand, and he pulled me up on my feet. I finched when the pain shot up my leg again.

He glanced up to read the street sign and back to me, “ Are you apart of Norman family?”
“Yes sir”
“ You are moving away to Kanto, I’m I right?”
“Y-yes.”

He frowned, looking up to the sky, “ I see you are unhappy with the situation. It’s hard to move away from where you grew up, I understand that very much.” He sighed, and started to walk forward. I fallowed him, limping a little to walk beside him. “ I had to move away from the person I loved so I could let him move on in life. In that I also had to leave my hometown.”

My eye’s widened, “ I’m so sorry.” This man had to move away from his loved one? Wow, I guess I’m a little lucky to leave with my family. He turned down my street name, and continued walking.
“ Why?” Maybe I shouldn’t have asked, but I wanted to know what caused him to leave. Did he do something bad to his family! Or did he traumatize his kid and-

“ His mother was sick.”
I stopped in my tracks. He also halted and glanced over his shoulder. Just like my mom… He turned half-way to me, his eye’s shadowed sadness and dis-pare. “ My wife was mentally ill, she accused me of being the reason of her always yelling at her son. I was realizing that the more I was here, the more my son was growing depressed. That’s when I decided to simply vanish from the picture.” He stared down at a dandelion on a neighbors lawn. He bent down, yanked it out, and twirled it between his fingers.
“ On my last day I was to be see him, I took him to the beach. He was so young back then, and never has gone to a beach. You should of seen the smile on his face.” John chuckled, watching the flower twirl. “ Well he found out I was going to leave him.”

The weed fell from his hand, floating gracefully to the ground. He stood there quietly, staring at the now limped dandelion. “ What did your son say?”

His silver eye’s carried mine, the water in his pupils were hard to look away from. “ He begged for me to stay. I dreaded having to decided to leave him behind, but it was for manly his own good. And for the first time ever, my son cried in front of me. He never did, because his mother told him I wasn’t worth crying for. Those eye’s, overflowed with tears. That was the last Image I remember the most.” John stepped closer to me, reaching out to rustle the top of my hair, like a child.
“ But now that I think about what I’ve done, I knew it was good. Because now he’s happy, and living his life with a smile on his face.”

His hand returned back to his hips, and the warm smile returned too. This man had his love, home, and son slip away from him. He has nothing and I’m complaining how horrible my life is? Oh, I feel so bad. I hugged the man, and backed away with my hand pupped up in the air, “ John, if I ever met your son, I’ll tell him all about you! I’ll take that to the grave!”

He laughed and rustled my hair again, “ Thanks May! It’s odd to see such a smile like that around here! But promise me something when you meet him ‘Kay?” I nodded, ready to accept anything he offered me, to tell his son. He smiled, “Tell him I still love him.”
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My eye’s re-opened, seeing the same bathroom I sat before, other then the silver eyed Man. Why does Ash remind me of him? “ There’s something up with that man, and Ash”

BBBBBBBBRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNN NNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGG!!!!!!

“ Ehhhh??!!!!” The bell! How long have I been in here!? Oh no, oh no this isn’t good! I found myself speeding out of the restroom and into the hallway were students were barely getting out. AH!!! I GOT TO HURRY!!!

I pushed my legs farther, dashing past students, and around them like an obstetrical course. My class was just up ahead, three more doors. Students cursed at me and hollered as I picked up my speed. If I didn’t get my bag in till… wait a second!

“ ASH DOESN’T KNOW THAT I HAVE COMPUTER CLASS OTHER THEN ART!!!”

AH! Things were getting worse, I thought I had art fifth period but I had it actually after chemistry! Eh! Oh god, now I have to dash and get my bag, then run back to my art class. I swung open the closed door, and lunged inside. Thankfully my station was close to the door. I yanked my bag off of my chair, swung it over my shoulder, and ran back out again before the door closed. My bag added extra weight, which was way WORSE, because it slowed me down. I wasn’t giving up yet! I won’t let ash down!

I skidded, facing right tords Building B, and flashed forward, pushing with all my might. I had to go past building B, down hallway A, and turn right to class 10-A. Uh… one thing that’s worse being new to a school, is that you have no Idea how to read your schedules right. I panted, my strength was dropping, but I fought it back, only pushing harder. Teachers demanded me to walk when I ran past them, but I ignored them still roaming forward. I hope I don’t end up in trouble… My stomach twisted in worry, what if I was too late! I turned left, down Hallway A. I’m almost there! I just hope he’s still there.

I was so close to my destination, all my strength was put into running. That’s when someone I didn’t attend in seeing appear in front of me. I was about to crash into him, I tried to slow down and stop. My feet tumbled forward wobbling out of control, I tried to lean back so I could fall on my bottom other then my head. It was to late, my head collided with the boys chest.

I released an gasp as the wind was knocked out of me, I fell on my knees, my lungs pled for oxygen. I wheezed, my hand clenched into my waist. The boy who I ran into laughed in an devilish tone, My eye’s widened in sudden fear. I know that laugh. his finger lifted my chin, forcing myself to look up to him. It was him… his blood-red eyes hold a dark presents.

“ We just keep bumping into each other don’t we?” I tried to turn my head away from him, but his hand curled around my chin. “ It seems that you are not a fond of me. That’s really a shame because I just find you very adorable.” He grinned evilly, quickly cuffing my wrists in one motion.

I yanked, and pulled, wanting to escape his clutches. He tightened his hold of me, his face darkened in anger. I yelped in pain; he was crushing my wrists. He yanked me up to my feet, driving me back into a near by wall in the hallways. My eye’s darted left and right, searching for anyone who was witnessing this happening. We were completely alone. Why was he doing this?! I didn’t do anything to him! I jolted, trying again to wiggle out of his hands. He griped harder, banging me against the wall to stop me from moving.

I gasped, narrowing my eyes, “ What do you want with me! Why won’t you leave me alone?!” I jolted again. He slammed my body harder into the wall.

“ My, aren’t you a fighter? I like girls who are hard to get.” His nose bristled up my neck, I felt his cold breath running down my skin. I jolted one more time, and was able to kick him in the shin. He cringed, his hold of me loosened. I was able to yank my way free, and fall to the ground.

I need to find Ash! I have to get out of here! I scrambled to my feet, pushing myself forward with the left over energy I had left. I needed to find him, I wanted to get away from this psycho! The hallways end was coming up, and I was panting, and breathing on the ridge of fainting. I need to move on! I can’t give-

A dark shadow hovered over me. I glanced over my shoulder to see Ryan’s arms wrap around me like sea weed, and sending me spiraling to the ground. My cheek banged into the cold tile floor. I wormed, and jolted pleading to escape this trap.

Ryan’s mouth hovered over my left ear, “If you think I’m going to let you go, then you got an other thing coming.” This was it wasn’t it. I wasn’t going to see ash was I? I let him down… I let him down. I faithlessly relaxed my body, I’m too late. He chuckled, “That a girl. See how easy this could be when you listen?”

“ Get your dam hands off her!”
I froze, the sweet voice I longed for was here! I looked up to see if it was to good to be true. It was him, in the flesh. He stood a couple feet from us, his hands were clenched by his sides, Jaw was clenched, and his hazel eye’s darkened in rage.

Ryan slammed me into the tile, I screamed in pain. “ What is a junior going to do about it!?” his arms were coiling me up tightly, like a snake. It hurts!! Stop please!

Then it disappeared.
The weight, the pressure, all vanished in one. But that was only because what I witnessed in front of me, was Ash kicking my predictor off me. He stood in front off me, guarding me from Ryan who was running tords Ash at full speed. He leaped and kicked him down to the floor beside me. I stared paralyzed in fright. Fortunately, Ash got up slyly, his fists were up ready to fight. Ryan ran to him again, only to be thrown across the hallway, and into the wall.

Ash grasped a handful of his uniform and brought him up to his face, “ WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU, TO THINK YOU CAN BEAT UP MAY LIKE THAT!” He punched him in the face, the blood rolled down his nose. “ HOW DARE YOU, EVEN PUT A FINGER ON HER YOU B ASTERED!” Ash then threw him to the ground.
He laid there unconsciously, his nose bleed down from his neck, on to his uniform.

I didn’t even move an inch, I was so scared that Ash was going to get hurt the same way I was. He huffed, turning half way to me. His eye’s didn’t showed rage anymore… but strangely guilt and shock. Why was he guilty? He walked over to me, his stance was careful and slow. He bent down in front of me scanning my face and wrist. Ash reached out, his hands lightly, and carefully picked up my wrists. I yelped, and drawled back my hand to my chest.

He gazed horrified by the evidence, “What did he do to you?” I shook my head, a wave of relief and sadness flowed out of my eyes. He was here, he saved me! I felt so happy that he was here, but yet so afraid of what could of happened to him if Ryan beated him up. His finger brushed under my eyelid, removing an tear.
“It’s okay, I’m here. Your safe, can you walk?” I nodded, and lunged forward to him.

I wrapped my arms around his chest, my tears were soaking into his shirt. He saved me! I sobbed in happiness, relived that both of us were okay. His hand patted my back, and brought me closer.
“ T-Thank y-you, so much. I-I was so s-scared. Thank you!” He didn’t respond back, but he wrapped one of his arm around my waist, and the other arm lifted me up from the ground.

“ Your going to be okay. Lets go, my friends want to meet you.” I nodded and walked beside him. He glanced down at me, his eyebrows furrowed, “ May can you do something for me?” I only stared back at him. “Don’t walk alone in the hallways.” He hugged my side, and returned back to focusing on walking forward.

I smiled, and wiped my tears away, " I must be a magnet for trouble.." He laughed, and playfully punched the side of my head.

" As long as I'm your friend, nothing wont ever happen to you." I was suddenly overwhelmed with the words that slipped out of him mouth. I was his friend! I giggled, my face was heating up again, Thank god for miracles...
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YEAH!!!!! So I HOPE that had some shipping...
- crosses fingers -
Ryan is such a meanie!!! >.< I couldn't help with making a action scene sorry!
R&R and I'll be writting up a new chap!
BYE!!!

[BlazeFusion76]

Congrats great chapter and...*drum roll*......
EXCELLENT SHIPPING!Brilliant I just loved it best chapter yet!I was a bit scared something was going to happen to may :O
You are now my no.1 author ^^
Oh and you said barry and dawn would appear...they didnt.Maybe I mis-read...
EDIT:BWHAHAHA,Advance4ev,I posted first reivew again ^^,just joking.

[advance4ev]

Oh... My... Gosh....
I'm sorry I'm just speechless. I don't even know where to start!!

Ok lets start at the beginning. That was so sad about May's past.     Spoiler:- I'm not sure this is even a spoiler but I don't wanna ruin it for anyone:

Show Spoiler

 
At first I thought she was moving because of Drew -you know like they break up and May just can't stand him anymore, unless that's also part of the reason.
 

Oh and I have a feeling who that mystery guy May saw was. (I don't wanna put a spoiler because I'm too lazy to.)

That fight. That's what got me speechless. *claps* Wonderful, just amazing how you described it. Ash the Hero saves the day once again. Also, total shippyness w00t w00t!!!!

Favorite Part in this Chap:

" As long as I'm your friend, nothing wont ever happen to you." I was suddenly overwhelmed with the words that slipped out of him mouth. I was his friend! I giggled, my face was heating up again, Thank god for miracles...

*squeals* Congrats, you made the little shippy girl in me come back. Anyways, that was superly sweet. *squeals*

Great, no scratch that, AWESOMELY BRILLIANT chapter!!!!

[Eon Master]

Holy Miltank... I'm speechless for the first time in months. That chapter was excellent, and the shippyness was awesome. You also showed Ash's protective rage in perfect detail. Only one thing I noticed.

“Do you really have to go May?” asked my friend. Brendon carried my bag of clothes down the stairs, trailing behind me.

I believe it should be spelled "Brendan", If you are thinking of the male character from R/S/E.

[Waterpokes]

Good chapter, even though the repeated Ash saves May this story or chapter, it never gets old. And Ryan, nice guy, yes?

Ryan got beat up by Ash, two years younger? Yeah yeah, Ash is the hero, well well.
Miracles, good thing we have them. And Brendon/Brendan, always liked him from the manga. I guess Ryan is coming back for more.

Good chapter and I eat my cookie now. *Gives thumbs up*

[XxMays_flowerxX]

this chappie is going to take some time...
:O
but here! I shall review!

Congrats great chapter and...*drum roll*......
EXCELLENT SHIPPING!Brilliant I just loved it best chapter yet!I was a bit scared something was going to happen to may :O
You are now my no.1 author ^^
Oh and you said barry and dawn would appear...they didnt.Maybe I mis-read...
EDIT:BWHAHAHA,Advance4ev,I posted first reivew again ^^,just joking

Yeah.. I wanted some ACTION!!! XD but wow.. i'm kind of shocked myself.
I thought this was my WORST ones but... I guess I'm wrong!
I proubly did say something like that. but in this chappie, there is shipping for all catgories. ( twinleafshipping, Advanceshipping, and pokeshipping ( I HAVE NO IDEA WHAT ITS CALLED!!!! ) )
thank you!

Oh... My... Gosh....
I'm sorry I'm just speechless. I don't even know where to start!!

Ok lets start at the beginning. That was so sad about May's past. Spoiler:- I'm not sure this is even a spoiler but I don't wanna ruin it for anyone:

Show Spoiler

At first I thought she was moving because of Drew -you know like they break up and May just can't stand him anymore, unless that's also part of the reason.

Oh and I have a feeling who that mystery guy May saw was. (I don't wanna put a spoiler because I'm too lazy to.)

That fight. That's what got me speechless. *claps* Wonderful, just amazing how you described it. Ash the Hero saves the day once again. Also, total shippyness w00t w00t!!!!

Favorite Part in this Chap:
Quote:
" As long as I'm your friend, nothing wont ever happen to you." I was suddenly overwhelmed with the words that slipped out of him mouth. I was his friend! I giggled, my face was heating up again, Thank god for miracles...

*squeals* Congrats, you made the little shippy girl in me come back. Anyways, that was superly sweet. *squeals*

Great, no scratch that, AWESOMELY BRILLIANT chapter!!!!

Well thank you so much!!!!
that spoiler... well it's not 'on target ' but... Drew will show up sooner or later..
( I don't know how to put a spoiler so hehe. )

ANY WAYS: YEAH!!! I'm so happy that there friends!! hehehehhe!
- grunts - well thank you ssssssssssooooooooooooooo much!

Holy Miltank... I'm speechless for the first time in months. That chapter was excellent, and the shippyness was awesome. You also showed Ash's protective rage in perfect detail. Only one thing I noticed.


Quote:
Originally Posted by XxMays_flowerxX
“Do you really have to go May?” asked my friend. Brendon carried my bag of clothes down the stairs, trailing behind me.

I believe it should be spelled "Brendan", If you are thinking of the male character from R/S/E.

Dam. I miss things like that! thank you! - bows -
- faints -
WHAT!? this really was one of my good chappies?
wow.. I'm still shocked myself!
thank you so much.

Good chapter, even though the repeated Ash saves May this story or chapter, it never gets old. And Ryan, nice guy, yes?

Ryan got beat up by Ash, two years younger? Yeah yeah, Ash is the hero, well well.
Miracles, good thing we have them. And Brendon/Brendan, always liked him from the manga. I guess Ryan is coming back for more.

Good chapter and I eat my cookie now. *Gives thumbs up*

Yeah Ryan.. - shivers in fear - his n-nice.

well... eh. um... yeah.. ash.
- slaps hands -
well! back to Ryan, he is... but with someone with him.
O.o

[BlazeFusion76]

NYAH!!!!! How long?XD Joking,I dont really mind,as long as its good and if its made by you itll be bound to be good!Oh and I laugh everytime I see the thing about the cat in your siggy XD poor cat...

[advance4ev]

Like BlazeFusion76 (who I will beat when next chapter comes) I don't really mind how long, as long as you don't abandon it (Which you better not!! Kidding, but seriously please don't abandon it.) Hmmm... I'm trying to figure out what's going to happen next. Perhaps the lunch time scene where everyone meets May? o.O

Anyways, can't wait to see what's in store next time! (Wait did that look like I was trying to rush you? ^^; )

[Eon Master]

Long wait?! I hate waiting! XD Jk, Just make it a good one. Could you tell us why it's going to take so long? Is it a long chapter, or is it just hard to write it?

[XxMays_flowerxX]

Well... One because so many shippings are put into this chapter.
and two: I need to make it gggggooooooooodddddddd!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
O.o I soung like DAWN!!!!!!

oh... the next chappie is yet to be done! I'm guessing tomorrow or later today!

[Eon Master]

oh... the next chappie is yet to be done! I'm guessing tomorrow or later today!

Wow... so much for waiting... That was incredibly fast, it takes me a week or longer to write chapters for my fanfic (unfortunatly not a shipping fic). How do you manage to pull that off?

[BlazeFusion76]

Huzzah!A post and-WAIT A SEC IM IN YOUR SIGGY???THHHHAAAAANNNNNKKKKK YOOOOUUUUUU SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!Seriously thank you,I could say that for like 5 minutes right now.Huzzah!A post maybe today or tomorrow!How can you sound like dawn when you are writing?

Edit:Omg eon we posted on same minute

[Waterpokes]

It's no problem waiting, people want stories and I give them some each summer.
Waiting for a year, they do.
But I can wait, I got plenty of time during the summer.

[Eon Master]

Huzzah!A post and-WAIT A SEC IM IN YOUR SIGGY???THHHHAAAAANNNNNKKKKK YOOOOUUUUUU SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!! Seriously thank you, I could say that for like 5 minutes right now.Huzzah! A post maybe today or tomorrow! How can you sound like dawn when you are writing?

Edit: Omg eon we posted on same minute

When she said she sounded like Dawn, maybe she meant when she said "gggggooooooooodddddddd!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"?

Edit: ZOMG! XD

[XxMays_flowerxX]

yeah in my next chappie she does that alot! ^.^
well the chapter is going along real fine so - grunts -
'no need to worry!

[BlazeFusion76]

When she said she sounded like Dawn, maybe she meant when she said "gggggooooooooodddddddd!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"?

Edit: ZOMG! XD

You cant sound like something when its writen,that dosent make any sense*slaps eon*

Also if you really did edit it would of said last edited by eon on such a date,dont bother changing it now,I WILL NO!

Edit:Woops your post lagged on my comp may,soz cant help it
Why did you have to put the overhyperactive dawn in it >.> Oh well on second thought it could be funny