I'm baaaaaacck!!!! Who missed me? xD
Well I'm just going to do Chapter 11 since everyone else basically said what I was would say for Ch.10.
On with the review!!(I think I say that waaaayy too much ^^;; )
I see you brought Drew in here. Sensing Advance vs Contest in the future(I think or Poke vs Advance but whatever). I should've known he was friends with that meanie Ryan. Like they say Negative(Drew)xNegative(Ryan)=Positive(THem being friends). Wait a minute, with them being friends, how is that a positive!?!? *presses buttons on calculator* Gah so confused!! @_@
Heh May's like me on computers, computers REALLY hate me and I have no clue what to do on them besides go on Internet and Documents ect. the basic stuff. I hated my Computer class, EXTREMELY boring, all we did was memorize the keyboard -_- Oops getting off topic Sorry!
This is exactly why I didn’t like computers particularly; they brainwashed you.
(I know BlazeFusion quoted this already but this line is worth quoting again.) So so true. I swear it's like they put some hypnotize person(forgot what they're called) inside the computer xD
May needs to eat...AGAIN!!!! XDD Funny, cause one moment in Haruka's Theme, she ate, like, 29 bowls of noodles in like 5 seconds, yet she looks like she hasn't gained a pound!! :O The things they do in anime.
This is a little random but...Are there any teachers monitering(I think that's the word) the students?? xD I mean first it was gym where the gym leader didn't even noticed nor reacted much when Dawn kicked the ball, and now May runs off (along with Ash) with the teachers not even stopping them. But hey, this is your story AND it's fiction so anything could happen. Plus, if they stopped them, the whole forest scene would be gone taking out the shippyness; and we all know that wouldn't be good. Again, going overboard Sorry(Sorry if I'm being to mean, I don't like being mean.).
Oh my gosh that scene with Ash and his Dad....whoa. I got so scared at the moment and I even thought that you were gonna put another cliffhanger. But you're not THAT evil. Lol Joke Joke. Anyways, good job May, saving John and protecting Ash from doing something that he could regret. Yay!!
Very cute scene with the jacket and the "I love you" part. I thought she sorta confessed her feelings too, sorta.
“I won’t laugh if that’s why you won’t tell me.” His voice was like velvet, sending me in a trance.
“Um, er. I –I met him in Hoenn, when I was packing up to leave to Kanto?” Holy crap, how did he do that?
xDDDD I thought that was pretty funny. Ash can hypnotize people XDD
Omg barely any quotes and I did a pretty long review :O Guess I should break my computer more often xD. Anyhow, Dawn's POV next time (which I assume means more twinleaf. Thanks to you I now love twinleafshipping.^^)AWESOME chapter and shippyness and can't wait for another AWESOME chapter.