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    Pretty good book! I want to ask you something. What exactly happens if your'e on the PM list? Does that mean you'll PM everyone on the list when a new chapter is up? Whatever, please put me on the PM list.
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    Quote Originally Posted by hailflameblast View Post
    Pretty good book! I want to ask you something. What exactly happens if your'e on the PM list? Does that mean you'll PM everyone on the list when a new chapter is up? Whatever, please put me on the PM list.
    I have no idea what the PM list is, I was just getting ready to ask kinger810 when I got on and read your post.

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    I discovered, read, and finished this fanfic and the first one today, and I must say that you have a great imagination! And it seems to be getting funnier as it goes on! There are several partsof this that I can completely picture in a MD game. You also seem to be getting better at writing in general as you go on. I'm waiting eagerly for the next chapter!

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    Sorry that it has been so long again. I haven't had much time lately to get on.



    Chapter 9
    On the Trail of Evil


    The shadows writhed atop the Capitol building. The enormous tyrant wrapped his serpentine body even more tightly around the stone structure. His wild instincts were resurfacing. The urge to completely annihilate all the life and civilization surrounding him was rising, barely contained within his savage heart. But something held him back. Rayquaza's tiny strand of consciousness was actually frightened. He had never known anything more powerful than himself. However, this was obviously false, for the presence looming over him chilled him to the bone. In that single moment of realization, Rayquaza knew the terrible truth: His body was not his own. Then, once again, darkness flooded his field of vision, and his consciousness abandoned him.


    "These tunnels are becoming a busy place."

    "Busy indeed. Abomasnow, you're the tracker. Get up here."

    A large, frosty Pokemon stepped up ahead of the other two. He kneeled down, examining the tracks left in the rocky dust on the tunnel floor. He sniffed, shifting his eagle eyes across the footprints. "Let's see. We've got...Piplup. Chimchar. Grovyle. There's also Cranidos and Shieldon."

    "That'll be the scouts that Bastiodon sent out ahead of us." One of the other figures stepped forward, flexing his four arms eagerly. "I wonder if he'll mind if we rough those two up along with the other intruders."

    "Steady there, Machamp. Save your strength for where it's really necessary."

    Machamp and Abomasnow turned back to face their leader. His spiked wrists and bushy tail were barely identifiable in the shadows in which he lurked. "What is it? You seem on edge."

    "I'm getting a bad feeling," the figure explained. "Something's up. I know this Grovyle!"


    "I-I can't keep this up much longer."

    "Yes, I agree."

    "Grovyle? You too?"

    "In case you haven't noticed, being frozen in a block of ice didn't exactly do wonders for my health."

    Piplup and Dusknoir both turned around. Chimchar and Grovyle were both lagging far behind, obviously exhausted from their brawls with Regirock and Regice. Chimchar was heavily bruised and battered, and Grovyle was shivering, his body almost put into hibernation from the extreme cold of Regice's Blizzard. Dusknoir sighed. "Fine, we'll take a break."

    "I don't know," Piplup frowned. "We remember what happened the last time we took a break, right?"

    Chimchar waved his hand dismissively. "Relax. What could happen?"

    "Steel!"

    A beam of silver light smashed into the ground at Chimchar's feet and the shockwave knocked him flat on his back. Piplup squared around in front of his partner, protecting him from further onslaught. Grovyle and Dusknoir rushed up beside him, preparing for whatever was approaching. "Get ready!" Piplup called.

    "Steel!" Suddenly, an iron golem loomed out of the darkness before them, its seven red eyes glowing silver as it readied another Flash Cannon.

    "Bonzai!" Piplup ducked and Chimchar bounced off his head, soaring through the air straight for the metal monster. He blasted it in the face with Flamethrower and landed in front of it, preparing to attack again. Before he could, though, the golem's head glowed silver, the same color as its Flash Cannon, and it rammed Chimchar, sending him crashing into the wall. He slumped unconscious, the strain of the battles finally too much for him.

    Dusknoir's fist flared as he drew back his Fire Punch. "It's Registeel!"

    Piplup frowned. "How do you know? You didn't know what Regirock and Regice were."

    "Well, I only assumed that after we met the first two, the third would have to show up eventually."

    "Yeah." Piplup's eyes narrowed. Dusknoir was seeming more and more suspicious by the minute.

    "Leave this place."

    Registeel's voice was just as mechanical as his brethren, Regirock and Regice. His eyes glowed deep scarlet as the blue-green sphere of Zap Cannon formed between his hands. He fired the orb straight for Piplup.

    "Oh no, I'm not missing out on another fight because I'm freakin' paralyzed! Again!"

    Piplup's Hydro Pump erupted forth from his beak, striking the Zap Cannon full on and creating a small explosion. Registeel took advantage of the cover of smoke and focused in on the vulnerable Dusknoir, firing another Flash Cannon.

    "Yikes!" Dusknoir dove aside just in time. The silver beam blasted through the space where he had been moments before. However, the attack was not a failure.

    "Aargh!"

    Grovyle went down like a sack of rocks as the beam hit him, zapping away the little energy that he had left. He collapsed onto his face, causing a small puff of dirt to rise into the air. Piplup gasped as he saw what had happened. "Grovyle! No!"

    Dusknoir winced. "Whoops."

    Piplup glared at the Ghost type. "That was your fault! You made Grovyle get hit! Chimchar's down too, so now it's just you and me! Or is that what you were planning?"

    "What I was planning? What are you suggesting?"

    "Dusknoir, I think that you're still out to get us."

    "What!?!?"

    "Well, you've been seeming pretty suspicious lately. I don't trust you, I'll put it as plain as that."

    "Leave this place."

    Piplup and Dusknoir were both sent sprawling by the surprise Flash Cannon. Dusknoir managed to rise back up quickly, striking Registeel in the chest with his Fire Punch. "Piplup, this isn't exactly the time to be discussing this!"

    Piplup jumped back up, spraying Registeel in the face with Hydro Pump. "Why wouldn't this be the time to discuss this? If I'm right about your plans, this will be the last chance to discuss it!"

    "In case you haven't noticed, Registeel's attacking me too!"

    "It could be a ploy, trying to reel me in so that you can make the final strike! You've already taken out Grovyle, and I'm next!"

    "I didn't make Grovyle get hit on purpose!"

    "Steel!"

    Piplup went down hard, taking a major hit from Registeel's Iron Head. The iron golem loomed up above him, charging up the finishing Zap Cannon. Piplup closed his eyes, too weak to retaliate. He could only wait for the pain.

    "Piplup!"

    Piplup opened his eyes and everything seemed to go in slow motion. The orb of Zap Cannon launched forth from Registeel's long silver fingers. The crackling electricity was bearing down on him. Then, from nowhere, Dusknoir was in the way. With an explosion of sparks, Dusknoir took the hit. He slammed into the ground, sliding and skidding for a few feet before coming to a stop.

    "D-Dusknoir?"

    Piplup gasped. He had never expected this. 'Most likely, this is part of Dusknoir's ploy...' he thought.

    'But no,' he said to himself. 'Dusknoir was never the kind of person to put his own well-being at stake just for his plan to succeed.'

    'Pah. He's a charlatan and a crook.'

    'He's reformed.'

    'He's a would be murderer.'

    'He's Grovyle's friend. Grovye wouldn't trust him without reason.'

    'Pah. He could have tricked Grovyle.'

    'But Grovyle is not easily tricked. Besides, Chimchar even trusts him.'

    '...'

    'Nothing to say, is there?'

    Piplup snapped back to attention. His internal struggle had finally been settled.

    He blasted Registeel full in the face with his Hydro Pump, and he didn't stop. He kept a continuous torrent of water spraying onto his opponent, forcing the iron golem into the wall. Even then, he didn't stop.

    "L-l-leave this p-place."

    "Dusknoir!" Piplup called. Somehow, he was able to speak while still keeping his Hydro Pump going steady. "Are you alright?"

    Slowly, shakily, Dusknoir floated back into the air. "I-I've been better." He staggered in the air, almost falling back to the tunnel floor, but he managed to regain himself. "Wh-what do you n-need?"

    "Focus Blast. Now. Give it all the strength you can."

    "Do I need to have enough energy left to survive? I'm guessing I could probably put my entire life force into the attack."

    "I'm guessing the result will be better if you don't kill yourself."

    "I was hoping you'd say that." With that, Dusknoir fired his Focus Blast. The blue orb struck Registeel in the chest, and the iron golem collapsed onto its face.

    Dusknoir collapsed again after launching his attack. Piplup hurried to his side. "Are you sure you're ok?"

    Dusknoir waved Piplup away. "Bah. I'm tough. I can handle things like this."

    Piplup looked at his feet ashamedly. "I'm sorry for not trusting you."

    "Oh, don't be sorry. You had absolutely no reason to trust me, not after what I've put you through before."

    Piplup shook his head. "No, really. Chimchar and Grovyle both obviously trust you, so I should have too." He stuck out his hand to Dusknoir. "Friends?"

    The mouth on Dusknoir's stomach twitched into a smile. He sat up slowly before extending his arm to Piplup, shaking his hand warmly. "Friends."



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    I knew it! And so did the other readers, for that matter. This chapter was great!
    Pardon me if I'm not being smart, but who are Abomasnow and Machamp? But these were my favorite parts:
    "I-I can't keep this up much longer."

    "Yes, I agree."

    "Grovyle? You too?"

    "In case you haven't noticed, being frozen in a block of ice didn't exactly do wonders for my health."

    Piplup and Dusknoir both turned around. Chimchar and Grovyle were both lagging far behind, obviously exhausted from their brawls with Regirock and Regice. Chimchar was heavily bruised and battered, and Grovyle was shivering, his body almost put into hibernation from the extreme cold of Regice's Blizzard. Dusknoir sighed. "Fine, we'll take a break."

    "I don't know," Piplup frowned. "We remember what happened the last time we took a break, right?"

    Chimchar waved his hand dismissively. "Relax. What could happen?"
    "Focus Blast. Now. Give it all the strength you can."

    "Do I need to have enough energy left to survive? I'm guessing I could probably put my entire life force into the attack."

    "I'm guessing the result will be better if you don't kill yourself."

    "I was hoping you'd say that." With that, Dusknoir fired his Focus Blast. The blue orb struck Registeel in the chest, and the iron golem collapsed onto its face.

    Dusknoir collapsed again after launching his attack. Piplup hurried to his side. "Are you sure you're ok?"

    Dusknoir waved Piplup away. "Bah. I'm tough. I can handle things like this."

    Piplup looked at his feet ashamedly. "I'm sorry for not trusting you."

    "Oh, don't be sorry. You had absolutely no reason to trust me, not after what I've put you through before."

    Piplup shook his head. "No, really. Chimchar and Grovyle both obviously trust you, so I should have too." He stuck out his hand to Dusknoir. "Friends?"

    The mouth on Dusknoir's stomach twitched into a smile. He sat up slowly before extending his arm to Piplup, shaking his hand warmly. "Friends."
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    I liked this chapter! I hope Dusknoir does not disappear. Can't wait for more!

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    Great chapter! I can only imagine that if after all that Dusknoir turned out to be evil... Of course that could just be my overactive imagination at work.

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    Aww...they've finally trust Dusknoir...sweet ^^

    Spiked wrist and bushy tails...umm...*is clueless*

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    Well good chapter there =] I though I missed a lot but it turns out you just posted one, and I mean one, after my last post xP

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    I know that Registeel was probably pretty predictable in that last chapter, but hey, trio appearances are typically pretty predictable, right?



    Chapter 10
    A Hitmonchan Named Larry


    "Rock."

    "Ice."

    "St-st-steel."

    The seven eyes of Registeel re-ignited firey red and it raised back to its rounded feet. It's Regi-Brethren stood before it, eyes glowing just as its own were. The three rounded in the tunnel, sensing the presence of their attackers not far ahead. Slowly, they began moving forward...


    Not far behind, too burly figures watched with amazement as the golems started away. Machamp and Abomasnow turned back to their boss, still lurking in the shadows. "Well, isn't this a strange turn of events."

    "I-I don't get it," Abomasnow sputtered. "There was absolutely no trace that those three were lurking here. Not even any footprints. The only reason we found them was because of all the battle damage to the tunnel."

    "Well, this is no reason to panic." The boss turned his head and and spat a seed into the dirt. "Those three were already weakened by their battles with the other three intruders."

    Machamp raised his two right hands. "But what about the two fugitives? We still haven't found any trace of them."

    "We'll worry about them once the surface-world intruders have been taken care of," the boss spat. Once again, a seed shot out.

    "Of course," Machamp and Abomasnow nodded as one. They turned back to face the Regis, which were still lumbering sluggishly down the tunnel. "But what about them?"

    The boss shrugged. "As I said, they've already been weakened by battle." He shot out of the shadows at lightning speed, aiming straight for Registeel's back. "We strike now!"


    "Ok, we took down Regirock. We took down Regice. We took down Registeel. That's all of them, right?"

    "Just so long as we don't come across Regigigas, now."

    "Don't even mention that, you'll jinx the mission."

    Piplup marched on ahead down the tunnel. Chimchar dragged along aways behind him, still more pulp than Pokemon after his beatings, Grovyle was still shivering after being frozen by Regice, and Dusknoir was barely floating after the attacks from Registeel. Out of all of them, Piplup was the only one still fit for battle, so he desperately hoped that they were done with their brawling for the day.

    "Piplup, we've got to find somewhere to bunk down for the night," Grovyle sighed.

    Piplup gasped. "Grovyle, you're asking for a rest? I can't believe it. And how do you know it's night, when there isn't any sky to see?"

    "Come now, Piplup," Dusknoir moaned. "We're on the verge of collapsing, here. And considering that if I fall unconscious, I fall out of the sky, I'd prefer to land of my own accord."

    Piplup sighed. "I suppose you're right. I think I see something up ahead, though."

    "He's right," Grovyle agreed. "It's a little brighter, like there's a lot more of the glowing moss. I think we're coming to a cavern."

    "And a pretty big one, from the looks of it," Chimchar added.

    As the four hauled themselves down the tunnel, they discovered that what they were entering was indeed an enormous chamber. The ceiling was a thousand feet above their heads if it was a foot. Piplup suddenly felt the weight of the surface pushing down all around him. "If the ceiling's clear up there, doesn't that mean that the surface is even further up?"

    "Oh, not a lot," Dusknoir shrugged. "Surely only another five-hundred or so feet more."

    Piplup swayed queasily and he almost passed out.

    "Hey!" Chimchar cried out suddenly. "Look!"

    Piplup and Dusknoir turned to see what Chimchar was pointing at. The remains of a cluster of ancient structures loomed ahead of them. They appeared as if they would collapse and turn into dust if breathed on. "That can't be safe," Dusknoir mused.

    "Imagine what a bargain you'd get from the realtors to live here," Chimchar snickered. "You couldn't pay me enough to stay here for one night."

    "Ah, but that is exactly what we must do," Grovyle pointed out. "This'll be better shelter than the open tunnel, agreed?"

    Chimchar grimaced. "Agreed, I guess."

    "What? You think this is some kind of motel? Well, you'll not be staying here tonight, or any other tonight! Turn back now, and perhaps I'll allow you to stay on this earth to see another day."

    The four looked up in alarm. For the first time, they noticed the being perched atop the ruins. His eyes were closed and he balanced on a single stone spire. The spherical sensors under his ears lifted into the air, staying suspended as if held. His eyes opened suddenly, revealing startlingly crimson irises.

    "Wh-who are you?" Piplup gaped. "What are you doing here?"

    "What am I doing here?" the figure growled, his long blue tail flicking madly. "I live here! Or, reside here currently, at least."

    Chimchar frowned. "You actually live here?"

    "Yes, I live here!" the figure howled. "I am Lucario, the Guardian of the Core!"

    Grovyle frowned. "The Guardian of the Core? You alone? Exactly what does it need protecting from?"

    Lucario nodded. "Well, it is not me alone. There is one other, but they are away now." He paused. "And you know very well what it needs protecting from."

    "What?" Dusknoir challenged. "Tell us, you lousy excuse for a canine!"

    "From what?" Lucario snarled and he leapt forward. "From you!"

    A long blue bone formed in his hands as he dove. He swung the thin weapon like a staff as he came down towards the group. Grovyle stepped up ahead of the others. The leaves on his wrists extended outward to form Leaf Blade as he prepared for the attack.

    But Lucario never reached them. The bone abruptly snapped in two as Piplup's Brick Break landed square in its center. Lucario fell back, landing gracefully on his feet, with Piplup landing in front of him. "Bring it!" Piplup taunted.

    "Piplup, what are you doing?" Grovyle called. "You're going to take him on alone?"

    "Well, none of you are exactly in good fighting condition," Piplup shrugged. "Really, I'm all we've got. Besides, you guys'll be in trouble if you take many more hits."

    Chimchar started to protest, but stopped as a Hydro Pump from Piplup sloshed against the ground at his feet.

    "Have at you!" Lucario cried. He bounded at Piplup, the spikes on his wrists glowing white. They extended forward until he had claws extending out across his hands. He swiped at Piplup, but the Penguin Pokemon used Brick Break again to block. The two jumped back, then back at each other again. The air clanged as the attacks continued to meet, like the swords of fencers.

    "You're not that bad!" Piplup admitted, staring Lucario in the face over their Brick Break and Metal Claw, which were at a standstill, neither able to break through.

    They backed away again, but this time Piplup lunged first. Lucario parried easily, the two pushing against each other, desperate to break through. "You're not that bad yourself."

    The two pulled apart once more. They continued sparring in this matter, lunging and parrying, then leaping back once again. As they clashed together again, Piplup began to speak. "I once knew a Hitmonchan. He was missing both arms and half an eye."

    Lucario danced back, then shot back forward. "What did you call him?"

    Piplup pondered for a second. "Larry."

    "What does that have to do with anything?" Lucario frowned.

    "I don't know," Piplup shrugged. "I was just trying to get you off your guard."

    "Well, let's end this now!" Lucario screamed. A blue light flared up around him, then formed into a ball between his hands. "The Aura is with me!" He launched the Aura Sphere straight for Piplup.

    Piplup retaliated with his Hydro Pump. "Whatever that means!" he whooped. The two attacks, both radiating raw energy, beared down on each other.

    Grovyle ushered Chimchar and Dusknoir back into the tunnels. "Let's back off, boys. When those attacks meet, it's not going to be pretty."

    Piplup and Lucario both tensed, waiting for the shockwave from the explosion. But it never came.

    "Stop!!!"

    The two looked up to see a round pink blur rushing towards the spot where the attacks would meet. "What are you doing?" Lucario gasped. "Get out of there, now! Let me finish this!"

    But it was too late. The attacks smashed into the flying shape, and the explosion filled the cavern with smoke.

    "No!" Lucario cried through the blackness. "Mew!!!"



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    Not as exciting as the last chapter, but still a pretty good one. I especially liked this part:
    "I once new a Hitmonchan. He was missing both arms and half an eye."

    Lucario danced back, then shot back forward. "What did you call him?"

    Piplup pondered for a second. "Larry."

    "What does that have to do with anything?" Lucario frowned.

    "I don't know," Piplup shrugged. "I was just trying to get you off your guard."
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    Quote Originally Posted by GalladeRocks View Post
    ...As they clashed together again, Piplup began to speak. "I once knew a Hitmonchan. He was missing both arms and half an eye."

    Lucario danced back, then shot back forward. "What did you call him?"

    Piplup pondered for a second. "Larry."

    "What does that have to do with anything?" Lucario frowned.

    "I don't know," Piplup shrugged. "I was just trying to get you off your guard."...
    Oldest. Trick. In. The book. Jack Sparrow would be proud (that was his joke origanally, right?" (Note: You need the bolded "K" added it)

    Eh, pretty good chapter. I guess this explains the fight in you're banner. Oh, and Larry says hello.
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    Awesome chapter! I wonder what will happen to Mew. can't wait for more!

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    Lol, Piplup has a good way of distracting xD

    One mistake spotted:

    "I once new a Hitmonchan. He was missing both arms and half an eye."
    It's "knew".

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    Man, you all realized a mistake, but I see two.

    Or, reside her currently, at least.
    The other mistake, the first one was pointed out already =/

    EDIT: Forgot to tell the correction, here

    "I once new a Hitmonchan. He was missing both arms and half an eye."

    Lucario danced back, then shot back forward. "What did you call him?"

    Piplup pondered for a second. "Larry."

    "What does that have to do with anything?" Lucario frowned.

    "I don't know," Piplup shrugged. "I was just trying to get you off your guard."
    Loled at this quote xD

    At least the Lucario - Mew guesses are correct now huh?
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    Thanks to all for pointing out my mistakes. This story might be quite a mess without you guys to look after it.


    Chapter 11
    En Guarde!


    Piplup and Lucario both reeled back as the wave of smoke washed over them. They closed their eyes, blocking out the burning air.

    Chimchar, Grovyle, and Dusknoir all hurried into the chamber, rushing to Piplup's side. As the smoke began to clear, Lucario searched through the air, desperately trying to find his flying friend. "Mew!" he cried. "Mew! Are you ok?"

    There was no answer.

    "What was that?" Dusknoir wondered aloud. "I saw a little pink thing just shoot inbetween the attacks, then nothing."

    "It was a Mew," Piplup answered.

    Chimchar nodded his agreement. "Yeah. We fought one before."

    "Or, rather," Piplup interjected. "We fought a Pokemon under the guise of a Mew."

    "A dear friend," Chimchar sniffed.

    Piplup sniffed too. "A very dear friend! A friend so dear, as to put our own lives ahead of ours!"

    "I'm getting the feeling that we're straying off-topic," Dusknoir cut in.

    "Er, sorry." Piplup snapped himself back to attention.

    Lucario suddenly bounded through the clearing smoke and landed just in front of Piplup. "You did this!" he screamed.

    "Me?" Piplup frowned. "What did I do?"

    "You came here! You trespassed! You're the doom of us all!"

    Grovyle stepped up closer to Lucario. "Exactly what did we do to make you think we're dooming you all?"

    "Well, um," Lucario trailed off. Suddenly, his aura suddenly flared blue around him. "I don't know! But all intruders here are to be eliminated!"

    Piplup stepped up to the challenge. "I didn't want to do this again, but I don't seem to have a choice. En guarde!"

    The two leapt at each other once again. Lucario's aura formed firey fists around his hands and he swiped at Piplup. At the same time, Piplup swung his Brick Break with as much force as he could muster.

    The resulting flash illuminated the tunnels for miles around.

    As Lucario and Piplup's arms met, there was an enormous crackling sound. Lucario's aura sparked and fizzled, sending a jolt of pain through both Pokemon. A sparkling silver glow suddenly lit up around Piplup, taking everyone by surprise. Wherever the the glow from Piplup touched Lucario's aura, the sparking grew even more violent, until the two were completely contained in a prison of light.

    "Wh-what's happening?" Chimchar gasped.

    "I-I have no idea," Grovyle admitted, awestruck.

    Dusknoir frowned. "And that's probably not a good thing."

    Chimchar took a step towards his partner, but Grovyle put a hand on his shoulder and pulled him back. "But Piplup-" he began.

    "No!" Grovyle commanded. "You can't go near those two. We have no idea what's happening, or what could happen!"

    "But we've got to help Piplup!" Chimchar shrieked.

    "I'll take care of that."

    The three looked up suddenly. The smoke around the ceiling had finally cleared, revealing the small pink figure from before floating inside a bubble of pink-green energy. "Mew!" Chimchar cried.

    "That's me!" the Pokemon cried out brightly. She dove down, smashing hard into Lucario's side. After a long moment, there was a huge cracking sound and Lucario was sent sprawling. This sent Piplup spinning to the ground, and the glow surrounding him faded slowly. Chimchar rushed to his side and helped him to his feet.

    Lucario slowly staggered to his feet. "Urg," he moaned. He turned to face Mew. "You're ok! I thought you might have been injured in the explosion."

    "I had my Protect shield up," Mew said. "How would I have been hurt?"

    Lucario opened his mouth to speak, then stopped and lowered his head in embarassment.

    Mew sighed. "Lucario, I'm a disappointed in you. Did you even try to talk to these Pokemon? No! You just attacked them out of the blue without even asking them why they were here!"

    "But-"

    "Shut up! I'd expected better than you. After all, you're the one who can read auras. Couldn't you have just looked at their auras to see if they had any evil intents?"

    "Um-"

    "I said shut up!"

    "..."

    "Ok. I'm finished."

    "Ok-"

    "Did I tell you you could speak yet?"

    "No-"

    "What did I just say?"

    "You didn't-"

    "What did I just say?"

    "..."

    "There. That's better."

    Mew and Lucario turned to face Piplup and Chimchar. "Um, excuse me for asking," Chimchar frowned. "But just who are you two?"

    "One moment," Mew shook her head. "Lucario, check their auras."

    "May I speak now?" Lucario asked.

    "Yes, you may speak."

    Lucario closed his eyes and the aura sensors on the side of his head pointed out horizontally. Slowly, he reached out his mind to Dusknoir. The aura had a tinge of black in it, but it was overshadowed greatly. Whatever it had been, it seemed to be diminishing.

    Next was Grovyle. His aura was sparkling clear, shining bright yellow in Lucario's mind. There seemed to be some sorrow lurking deep beneath the surface, though. Perhaps a loved one lost? Lucario couldn't tell.

    He moved his consciousness on to Chimchar. The aura was a sky blue, giving off great feelings of both timidness and confidence at the same time. 'These Pokemon,' Lucario thought. 'They aren't what I thought. They are so much more.'

    Finally, his closed eyes shifted to view Piplup. Lucario flinched back in pain, blinded by Piplup's shimmering silver aura. This was no ordinary Pokemon.

    "They're all clear," Lucario spoke up at last. He pointed to this one. "And this one's special."

    Mew frowned. "Special?" She looked down at Piplup. "Just what are you guys doing down here? And why are you so 'special'?"

    "Are you guys running a tight schedule?" Piplup questioned.

    "Are we clear?" Lucario turned to Mew.

    Mew nodded. "We're clear."

    Lucario turned back to Piplup. "We're clear."

    "Good," Piplup smiled. "We'll explain all to you, but it'll take a few hours."



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    Great chapter! Now I know what Piplup, Chimchar, Grovyle and Dusknoir's auras look like! I can't wait for more!

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    Your stories are very good I really enjoy reading them

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    You know, Mew acted as if she was the boss of Lucario...xD It's really funny how you set the two up this way (:

    Dusknoir's aura has a tinge of black? Maybe he's still in the process of turning from bad to good...

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    Lol at Mew and Lucario's conversation xD

    Well I'm wondering why Piplup's aura is Silver. I know it's actually a human, with the dimensional scream and such.

    And Dusknoir's aura looks creepy, or maybe it's Dusknoir the creepy one. I can't tell xD

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    I love this story, man. I especially like the humor and the onesided cconversations with piplup and Chimchar and Piplip's comebacks. Keep up the good woek, and don' stop withthe snarky lines from Dusknoir!
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    Ooh. What an interesting chapter.
    Lucario closed his eyes and the aura sensors on the side of his head pointed out horizontally. Slowly, he reached out his mind to Dusknoir. The aura had a tinge of black in it, but it was overshadowed greatly. Whatever it had been, it seemed to be diminishing.
    It's diminishing? Yay!

    Next was Grovyle. His aura was sparkling clear, shining bright yellow in Lucario's mind. There seemed to be some sorrow lurking deep beneath the surface, though. Perhaps a loved one lost? Lucario couldn't tell.
    Sorrow? Loved one lost? Only one explanation... Fairy godparents! Joke, joke. What I really think is that he's sad since Celebi got frozen in time. But, then again, it's obvious...


    He moved his consciousness on to Chimchar. The aura was a sky blue, giving off great feelings of both timidness and confidence at the same time. 'These Pokemon,' Lucario thought. 'They aren't what I thought. They are so much more.'
    Pretty ordinary aura.

    Finally, his closed eyes shifted to view Piplup. Lucario flinched back in pain, blinded by Piplup's shimmering silver aura. This was no ordinary Pokemon.
    Wow. Special aura= Epic win.
    Now to wait for next chapter...
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    Sorry that it's been SOOOOOOOOO long since I posted a chapter. I've been very busy lately, what with vacation and readjustment back to everyday life. I should be able to post more often again now.



    Chapter 12
    I'M NOT NAGGY!!!


    "Rock!"

    "I-I-Ice!"

    "St-Steel!"

    The three golems went down without a fight. Machamp and Abomasnow stood triumphantly over them. "Heh, that was easier than it should have been," Machamp mused.

    "They were weakened from battle, though," Abomasnow pointed out.

    "True. Not only were they weakened, those surface world strangers actually knocked them out."

    "They're not all strangers," the Boss muttered, already striding ahead down the tunnel.

    Abomasnow hurried to catch up. "What was that?"

    "Er, nothing."

    Machamp looked over his shoulder uneasily at the unconscious Regis. "Those guys'll surely stay down for a while, won't they?"

    "They are Legendary Pokemon," Abomasnow said. "We can only hope."


    Crackle crackle!

    "Ah, that feels good!"

    "Man, I'm starving! Are they cooked yet?"

    "Yep, they're just finished. Careful, they're hot!"

    Piplup and Chimchar sat beside a roaring fire, happily nibbling away at roasted berries. The flickering flames made the large cavern and decrepit ruins seem a little more homely. Grovyle and Dusknoir sat beside them, with Lucario and Mew directly opposite. For a while, there was silence. Lucario was the first to speak.

    "Alright, let's get to business. As I'm sure you've gathered, I'm Lucario. And this is-"

    "I'm Mew," Mew cut in. "Thank you, Lucario, but I can introduce myself."

    "Of course..." Lucario glowered at Mew.

    "Go on, talk!"

    "I'm talking, I'm talking!"

    "Then go on!"

    "I can't talk until you quit interrupting me!"

    "I can't quit interrupting you until you start talking!"

    "Quit naggin' me, woman!"

    "What did you say?!?!?!"

    "Oh crud."

    Piplup and the others could only watch in amusement as Mew began to chase Lucario in circles, screaming at him the entire time. "I'm not naggy! I'M NOT NAGGY!"

    "Dear Arceus, alright! I'm sorry! I'm SORRY!!!"

    Finally, the two settled back into their seats, out of breath. Slowly at first, then more loudly, a laugh began to emanate from somewhere nearby. Chimchar looked around wildly before finally finding the source of the noise. "Dusknoir?"

    Dusknoir looked up, grinning mischievously. He was still laughing. "Yep."

    "What's so funny?" Lucario growled.

    Dusknoir stopped laughing, then looked up at Lucario and Mew. "Well, it's just that if I didn't no any better, I'd say you two were sweet on each other."

    "What!?!?" It was both Lucario and Mew. They glanced towards each other and quickly whirled away from each other. Neither one saw the other one blushing.

    "Sorry for interrupting," Dusknoir apologised. "Just had to speak my mind."

    Grovyle couldn't help but smile at the pair's antics. Ah, to be in love. His smile faded. He rose silently and turned away from the fire.

    "I think I need to take a walk. You guys go on and talk without me."

    Chimchar stared after Grovyle worriedly as he strolled off towards the entrance into the tunnels. "What's wrong with Grovyle?"

    Piplup sighed. He knew. "He's missing Celebi."

    "Well, duh. We all miss Celebi. That's why we're down here now."

    Dusknoir sighed at Chimchar's ignorance. "Ah, young Chimchar, you fail to see the bond between your friends from the future."

    "Well, I guess you're right. They've got to be pretty close, after all the time they'd been alone fighting against near impossible odds."

    "No, Chimchar, there's something deeper between them."

    "Deeper? Like in their stomach?"

    "No, deeper."

    "Intestines?"

    Dusknoir was exasparated. "Er, uh...Piplup?"

    Piplup put his arm on Chimchar's shoulder. "Chimchar, sometimes, when a man...er, when a Pokemon and a woman...er, female...Oh, now I'm all flustered!"

    "Sorry," Chimchar shrank back. "Wait, what'd I do?"

    "You'll understand when you're older," Piplup explained. "That's the best I can do."

    "Alright, whatever you say."

    Piplup pulled Dusknoir away for a moment. "What exactly did you think you were doing?"

    "What do you mean?"

    "Trying to talk to Chimchar about the Birds and the Beedrills! Just what do you know about women?"

    "Pah! That's the pot calling the kettle black!"

    "Whatever! But what do you of all people know about..." he shuddered. "Females?"

    Dusknoir grinned. "Pah, again! I'm hurt, Piplup, hurt! I've known plenty of women in my day, and some even liked me! Well, you know, slightly. Well, there were a couple who didn't hate my guts. There was...no, wait, I ended up arresting her...There was...no, I think the Sableye got to her..."

    "I give up! Come on."

    The two rejoined Chimchar by the fire. "Now, as I was attempting to say before," Lucario began. "I'm Lucario, and this is Mew. And before we tell you our story, we'd like to hear yours."

    "Well, I'm a newt," Dusknoir introduced. "And these are my friends, the badger and the platypus." He gestured to Piplup and Chimchar, respectively.

    Chimchar glared up at Dusknoir. "Why do I have to be the platypus?"

    Piplup butted in, sighing. "Sorry about that. I'm Piplup, and these two bozos are Chimchar and Dusknoir."

    "Bozos!" Chimchar and Dusknoir snarled simultaneously.

    Piplup ignored them. "Yes, the Two Stooges. And our other friend is Grovyle. We're from the surface world, you see."

    "The surface world!" Lucario gasped.

    "Then it must be true!" Mew beamed. "You've come to stop Rayquaza?"

    Piplup frowned. "No, we haven't heard of any Rayquaza. We're here to stop Darkrai. He's an evil Pokemon from the surface world, and he's almost succeeded in destroying it twice. Now, he's come down here to try to do it again."

    "This Darkrai sounds like one bad fellow," Mew frowned. "So you came all the way down here into the Core chasing him?"

    "Yep. He's a powerful foe, but we've stopped him before. We hope to do it again. He's stolen some Time Gears, so-"

    Lucario and Mew both reeled back in horror. "He's stolen Time Gears and brought them down here?" Lucario yelled. "That can only mean one thing!"

    "He's headed for the Wheel of Time," Piplup announced.

    "Oh, I was afraid you'd say that," Mew groaned.

    "What's so bad about the Wheel of Time?" Chimchar cut in. "Sure, Darkrai can use it to freeze the planet again and become the ultimate ruler of time, but we can stop him before he does it."

    Mew shook her head. "Sadly, it won't be that simple."

    "What do you mean?" Piplup inquired. "We're on the right track, aren't we?"

    "Yes, you're going in the right direction," Lucario nodded. "But the Wheel of Time won't be easy to get to."

    Mew nodded in agreement. "To get there, you have to go through the city, and, well..."

    "Well what?" Dusknoir urged. "Out with it!"

    "The city has been taken over," Lucario explained. "Rayquaza, an enormous monster, has overcome the city."

    Piplup, Chimchar, and Dusknoir all gasped simultaneously. "The Monster of the Core!"

    "Rayquaza's a monster, alright," Mew agreed. "And he has an entire army of Cranidos and Shieldon fighting for him."

    "That explains that group that attacked us before!" Piplup exclaimed.

    "Well, from the sound of things," Dusknoir grumbled. "The Core has suddenly become a much more dangerous place. How did we not see this coming?"




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    Piplup put his arm oh Chimchar's shoulder. "Chimchar, sometimes, when a man...er, when a Pokemon and a woman...er, female...Oh, now I'm all flustered!"

    "Sorry," Chimchar shrank back. "Wait, what'd I do?"
    Haha, Chimchar needs to grow up sometimes... xD

    Btw, Piplups have flippers, not arms, I learnt that off someone who reviewed my fic...

    Aww... poor Grovyle... ): And Lucario and Mew are really funny when they were arguing ^.^

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    Quote Originally Posted by GalladeRocks View Post
    "Alright, let's get to business. As I'm sure you've gathered, I'm Lucario. And this is-"

    "I'm Mew," Mew cut in. "Thank you, Lucario, but I can introduce myself."

    "Of course..." Lucario glowered at Mew.

    "Go on, talk!"

    "I'm talking, I'm talking!"

    "Then go on!"

    "I can't talk until you quit interrupting me!"

    "I can't quit interrupting you until you start talking!"

    "Quit naggin' me, woman!"

    "What did you say?!?!?!"

    "Oh crud."

    Piplup and the others could only watch in amusement as Mew began to chase Lucario in circles, screaming at him the entire time. "I'm not naggy! I'M NOT NAGGY!"

    "Dear Arceus, alright! I'm sorry! I'm SORRY!!!"
    Never say that a Mew is naggy. She'll KEEEL YOU!

    Piplup put his arm oh Chimchar's shoulder. "Chimchar, sometimes, when a man...er, when a Pokemon and a woman...er, female...Oh, now I'm all flustered!"

    "Sorry," Chimchar shrank back. "Wait, what'd I do?"

    "You'll understand when you're older," Piplup explained. "That's the best I can do."
    O_O

    Dusknoir grinned. "Pah, again! I'm hurt, Piplup, hurt! I've known plenty of women in my day, and some even liked me! Well, you know, slightly. Well, there were a couple who didn't hate my guts. There was...no, wait, I ended up arresting her...There was...no, I think the Sableye got to her..."
    The above paragraph is made of pure, epic wintonium.

    "Well, I'm a newt," Dusknoir introduced. "And these are my friends, the badger and the platypus." He gestured to Piplup and Chimchar, respectively.

    Chimchar glared up at Dusknoir. "Why do I have to be the platypus?"
    STOP MAKING OBSCURE REFERANCES!

    Lucario and Mew both reeled back in horror. "He's stolen Time Gears and brought them down here?" Lucario yelled. "That can only mean one thing!"

    "He's headed for the Wheel of Time," Piplup announced.

    "Oh, I was afraid you'd say that," Mew groaned.
    What did you expect him to say? That he wanted to take them so that he could share a cup of tea?

    "Well, from the sound of things," Dusknoir grumbled. "The Core has suddenly become a much more dangerous place. How did we not see this coming?"
    Simple. Because, as charactures in a fanfic, you are not allowed to know the plot.


    All in all, about a 9/10 compared to the rest of you're chapters. That is, it was one of the best, but there are better out there. Of course, if I were grading against ALL fanfics, 10/10.
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