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    The Blue Beginning


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    (Note: this is best read between Chapters 7 & 8 of The Sapphire Story)
    Welcome to The Blue Beginning! This one-shot gives insight of eight scientists who's experiments
    cause the events that end up becoming the plot for The Sapphire Story.
    This One-Shot is rated PG-13 for some mild violence, swearing, and pregnant women. :P
    Like always, thanks to Blue_Mew22 for her beta-ing.


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    The Blue Beginning





    Tclech.

    The sound from the digital clock was loud compared to the silence in the shadow-covered room. A rectangular computer screen on a young man's desk was shining bright enough to illuminate a few feet around it. The young professor had navy-blue hair, which he swept back behind his ears. He crouched over his desk, reading an old article about a legendary Pokémon from outer space. It was written by Brittany May, one of his former colleagues – she used to study ancient legends of Pokémon that are said to have mystical powers and she also wrote many articles for newspapers about them. She even dated him for a while, but they broke up after she caught him with his current lover.

    It was almost hysterical to him, actually. She popped in on him while he was watching a movie with his new girlfriend. As they were watching the movie, they started talking and learning more about each other than they had known, and after one thing led to another, she was on top of him, lips pressed to his, both of them undoing their clothing. He hadn’t meant for it to happen, but it did, and Brittany saw them and threw a fit, screaming at him that they were over.

    But that was four years ago, so what did it really matter now? She took on journalism and he continued studying the ancient legends. Her article was a year old, but it was very intriguing and helpful to his research on ancient Pokémon and their abilities that no other Pokémon had. He was the top Professor of the research lab in Cerulean City and was studying the mythical Pokémon Deoxys – many people believed that it did not exist, but a few claimed to have seen it. A blurry black-and-white photo clipping was pasted within the article he was reading. The Professor could barely make out what the photo was really trying to portray, but the article made up for that disappointment.

    As he read, young Professor Kalmin grew more and more interested. His ex really had a way with writing articles about Legendary Pokémon, most likely because of her former studies on the topic.

    Tuesday, March 21, 1989: Another believed sighting of the legendary Pokémon Deoxys was reported yesterday. The Pokémon that is said to have been created deep within space is not even classified as a Legendary Pokémon by some, due to the fact that no one knows where it really came from or what it can do. Scientists who have studied this Pokémon believe that there are multiple "forms" that this creature can appear as, though this information was never actually confirmed.

    The sighting today came from Vaxil Eweulb, a resident of Solaceon Town in the Sinnoh region. He reported seeing a red and blue Pokémon go through the sky. His report states that Deoxys was flying through the sky with a light blue glow emanating from itself, as well as a somewhat large, unidentified object below it. Our crew suggests that Deoxys was using the move Psychic to carry whatever it was using the attack on, but we do not yet know why it was, or if this is even true. Mr. Eweulb says that he saw the Pokémon deposit the object on top of Mt. Coronet, but the location is not yet fully known yet either.

    We will bring you more on this developing story as we learn more for ourselves. Whether you believe any of this or not, this is Brittany May, signing off.


    Kalmin rubbed his already-bloodshot eyes and stuffed the article into the open folder on his desk before searching for a spot to put it away. His desk was covered in different size papers, all of which had been scribbled on with his chicken scratch. There were drops of food and bits of trash on the papers, but it was no use cleaning them since the garbage can was already overflowing with trash. On to the floor, next to the desk, was a small, blue, hand-knit Pokémon bed, in which was his sleeping Charmander. Its orange torso gently lifted up and down as it slept. The long orange tail attached to its back end curled up close to its face, the fire that burned on the end of it softly kindling away.

    When Kalmin arrived at work his desk was neatly organized, with papers inside correct folders, his research books in tidy piles, and notebooks arranged in an orderly fashion next to the keyboard. Now it was two in the morning and all he was doing was waiting for his research team to return; they were on a trip to Mt. Coronet to try and find the object that the Deoxys was said to have deposited there, even though the report was written a year ago and no one ever even found anything. Yes, Kalmin read the article hundreds of times since it was printed in The Daily Chatot, but it never said anyone found anything and he had complete confidence his research team. This was the research teams’ sixth time to the mountain range to search for it, the other five all resulting in failed searches.

    As he was allowing his eyelids to close the last few centimeters to cover his eyes, he heard the phone on his desk ring. He scrambled through the clutter, revealing a tan phone on its charger, attached by a long colored cord. He picked it up and answered it.

    “Hello?” he groggily asked.

    The voice on the other end did not reply right away. All Kalmin heard was a deep breathing into the receiver of the person calling. Just as he was about to ask who was there, the voice spoke up.

    “Kalmin,” it said, the voice shakily, “We found it.”


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    It was the nine o’clock in the morning and Kalmin was already on an airplane headed for Eterna City in the Sinnoh region. The city was just at the foot of Mt. Coronet, and his research team was waiting in the city for him at their second laboratory – they owned two others, one in each of the Johto and Hoenn regions. They never stayed in one long enough to get settled in, so all seven members of the team were used to traveling every few months or so wherever they had something new to research.

    As Kalmin was on the plane, all that he could hear in his head were the words “We found it,” playing over and over again. Charmander sat in the seat next to him; his eyes were wide open as he watched the puffy white clouds pass his window, revealing a beautiful view of Sinnoh when they cleared. All of the towns and cities looked so tiny that only the really large buildings were noticeable, as well as Mt. Coronet, the mountain range that divided the region into two almost-perfect sides.

    Soon, I’ll be up there with my greatest discovery yet, Kalmin thought. He clenched his fists in excitement and looked at his reflection in the window. Surprisingly, he couldn’t even tell that he only got a few hours of sleep, his hair in the same, swept-back position as before, eyes the normal white color, and his smile never leaving his face. Charmander looked at his master and couldn’t help smiling to itself, even though it had no idea what was going on.

    “We finally did it, Charmander,” Kalmin said, noticing his partner looking at him, “we finally found what Deoxys brought to our planet from outer space – soon, we’ll be rich from this discovery!”


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    As Kalmin moved through the streets of Eterna, he literally could not hold in his excitement and smiled at people he passed all through the city and said hello to well over fifty people he didn’t know. Kalmin passed by numerous buildings, including the Eterna Pokémon Gym and the Pokémon Center, before coming to a clearing near the northeastern section of the city. When he got here, his brisk walking slowed to a casual stride, despite his overjoyed emotions. As he walked through the small clearing, he calmed down a bit. In this part of the city, the wind blew more gently with the wide-open spaces and the grass swayed with ease.

    This part of the city was more designated as a park and Kalmin could already see the many parking areas for bikes and wooden benches in the area for people to sit and chat on. Straight ahead of him were stone steps that lead to three large statues at the center of the park. The stairs went the entire length around the elevated section with the statues and were formed by small, rectangular gray stones with a few gold ones in random spots.

    Kalmin approached the steps and stopped for a moment, taking a deep breath of fresh air. Charmander – who had gone unnoticed by many of the people that Kalmin walked by – did the same and wondered what the two were doing. Once Kalmin surveyed the park, they began up the steps and walked over to the statues. All three of them were awe-inspiring and made of gold, their huge figures towering over Kalmin by a good four feet. He saw photos in history books of the statues, but never got to actually see them for himself. These statues of Dialga, Palkia, and Giratina were built in their honor after their legendary fight in Sinnoh thousands of years ago. Kalmin examined each one in awe and read their descriptions, too.

    Dialga, the Legendary Pokémon said to control time, was the first statue Kalmin looked at and it was standing on its four, long legs. Its large stature stood high above Kalmin and the diamond on its chest shone vibrantly in the morning light as it was colored a deep, pure blue to stand out among the rest of the statue. The same went for the bright pink pearl that was on each of the arms of the Palkia statue. Palkia stood upright on its two legs and its fearful, jagged-tooth-filled mouth was wide open like it was growling.

    Kalmin stood in awe, placing his hands on the statues in front of him. Behind the two was the last of the statues, and it was even more marvelous. Wavy, silk-like “wings” sprouted from the creature’s back, each one having pointed tips at the ends. Its spiked tail, making it stand a few feet taller than the others, held up its serpentine body. Kalmin looked into the eyes of the Giratina statue and saw the fearful gaze of the Pokémon pierce right through him.

    “I knew you would like them,” a voice from behind him said in a chuckle. Kalmin whipped around, his navy blue, shoulder-length hair flying past his face for a moment. He saw a man about the same age as him smiling, hands in his pockets. He quickly walked up to Kalmin, moving one of his hands from his pockets running it through his long – but only long enough to cover his ears – blood-red hair, messing it up a bit. Kalmin wasted no time in finding out what he had wanted to hear for the past few year of his life.

    “So you found it?” he hastily asked Okmis, his fellow colleague and best friend.

    “Yup,” Okmis replied with a wide grin, “it’s back at the lab.”

    “Well what are you waiting for, let’s go!”


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    “Marisa, status report,” Kalmin asked a woman with long, emerald hair that flowed effortlessly down her back and stopped at her thighs. She was sitting at a desk covered in research papers, all about the Deoxys Meteor she and the rest of the research team found at the Spear Pillar last year. She pulled out a nacho cheese Dorito and munched on it before turning in her black office chair, exposing her large, pregnant stomach, and answering.

    “Well, I’m eight-months pregnant and I’m due in about a month, thanks for asking like every normal husband does,” she remarked rudely to her husband. Kalmin found his wife switching between different mood swings each time he spoke to her, and couldn’t wait until it was all over. Marisa knew he was asking about a status report on her research, and she soon stopped glaring and replied with, “I have nothing on what it’s made of – it seems to be something from another planet, which is what I said earlier and I highly doubt that’s going to change.”

    Not feeling like arguing, Kalmin gave her a small nod and walked across the large research lab. The entire building was one floor, with only a main room for research, a tiny supply closet, and a bathroom. Each of the eight members on the research team had a desk situated around the room, and in the center was where the Deoxys Meteor was kept since they found it. When Kalmin first took a look at it, it was huge, occupying the entire space it was kept on, but now – after a year of research – it was scattered around in pieces, each being examined for different purposes. As he was walking by the pieces, he saw Gwendolyn Mascheriet, his friend Okmis’s wife. She had her black-framed, rectangular glasses on and was studying the bits of rock in front of her so intently that she didn’t even hear Kalmin walk up to her.

    “Kalmin!” she said, clearly shocked by his presence.

    “Gwen,” he said friendly, “How’s it coming along? I never quite know what you’re up to.”

    “Everything’s fine,” she said, smiling and quickly walking away. Kalmin narrowed his eyes and slightly glared at her as she walked away. After a minute of glaring, Kalmin continued on his task to ask each team member their status on what they were researching. Luckily, he only had to ask the last four members – Gwen was working as a partner with Carly Harte, so their work was the same – and they were all in a group to find out what the meteor contained, if anything. It was funny that each person on the team was married to someone else on the team – Okmis and Gwen Mascheriet, Kevin and Carly Harte, Wanda and Bryon Marly, and he a Marisa Emera.

    Okmis, Kevin, Wanda, and Bryon were the four trying to figure out if the Deoxys Meteor contained anything or not. Sadly, they only found a few strange chemicals so far that they weren’t even sure about. As Kalmin walked over to them, Wanda quickly walked away, carrying a small bit of the meteor in her hands. The rest of them continued to look through magnifying lenses and microscopes at what was in front of them.

    “Anything turn up yet?” Kalmin asked a bit sarcastically, not really expecting anything to have turned up.

    “Not really,” Okmis replied, rubbing his hand through his now-natural colored, dark brown hair. He usually continued to re-dye it the same blood-red color, but since he had been in the lab most of the time studying, he never had the time.

    “Wanda just went over to the scanner on the computer to analyze something,” Bryon butted in, “and we think something might be there – we’re not sure as to what yet, but there definitely was something we haven’t seen yet.”

    Kalmin tried not to get his hopes up, as Bryon was normally the one out of all eight of them to be optimistic about their findings. He smiled and looked back through his microscope, fiddling with the magnification lens. Kalmin wondered how his large fingers could function so easily – Bryon wasn’t fat or anything, he just had a large, slightly muscular frame to him.

    “H-hey, Kalmin,” Wanda called from the computer she was using to scan what was a potential discovery of the contents of the meteor, “come look at this and tell me what it looks like to you.”

    Kalmin strode over and looked at the computer screen. What he saw took him by surprise for a moment – a bunched of different colored dot structures floated around on the scan of the meteor, and they were definitely something.

    “I’m not sure what these are, and I certainly don’t have any idea of what they could be, but this is amazing,” Kalmin answered, still a bit amazed. The rest of the group was now crowded around the screen, all trying to find out what they were looking at. Kalmin’s wife gasped as she looked at the screen, making a few of them look at her a bit strangely. They knew it was some sort of advancement in their research, but they didn’t think it was too amazing.

    “Try to combine it with a part of the meteor that it was near,” Marisa suggested, unconsciously stroking her stomach. In a flash, Okmis left and returned with another chuck of the meteor. Kalmin took it from him and – without thinking – smashed it into the other piece, both of them not even trying to stay together. On the screen, everyone saw the small, multi-colored dots swirl around and become a much larger amount now that there were more of them combined.

    “This is definitely something,” Kalmin said. He was in awe for the first time since they actually found the meteor, and he wasn’t about to let himself become un-amazed.

    “All right, I want everyone to stop what he or she was doing and start trying to separate what we’ve got here by their corresponding colors.”

    “What?! But there are thousands of those things! It could take weeks to do that!” Marisa complained, in another grumpy mood swing.

    “Marisa,” Kalmin said, putting one hand on each of her shoulders, “This is all that we’ve found in the year we’ve researched this – we could’ve finally found our breakthrough!”

    Marisa didn’t look him in the eyes, and instead got out of her husband’s light grip and walked back to her desk. Kalmin sighed, and immediately got to work without asking anyone their views on separating what they’d seen on the screen.


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    Later that night, Kalmin was still up studying the bits of the meteor. No one in the group was up besides his wife, but she was clicking around on the computer after getting bored of trying to separate the dots. No one made any progress in separating them, and Kalmin wasn’t about to just stop and give up. The other six scientists left more than four hours ago to stay at a hotel they had room keys for.

    “I just think we should take a different approach to this,” Marisa said, breaking the silence after she stopped clicking around for a moment, “How exactly are you going to separate them? One, they’re way too tiny to do it by hand, and two, those scans are what’s inside the meteor – even when you broke it earlier it was still inside the bit left over.”

    Kalmin sighed again and looked up from his work.

    “And you’re suggesting…?”

    “I think we should do what people have done before for stuff like this – a few years ago some scientists thought they found part of the Legendary Pokémon Regice. They tried doing DNA tests, but they couldn’t get anything from the part they had and they saw almost the exact same things we saw – a bunch of dots that were scrambled around. So instead they melted part of what they had and were able to find that they were seeing millions of DNA particles that were just not joined together, and once they were melted they seemed to link up and create the DNA.”

    “When did you read that?” Kalmin asked a bit intrigued. Marisa smiled and turned her computer monitor towards her husband.

    “About a minute ago on this online news article.”

    Kalmin got up and walked to the computer to read the article. Surely enough, there had been scientists who had melted part of what they thought was a section of Regice and fond that the DNA was a match. Kalmin smiled at his wife and bent down, kissing her passionately.

    “This is one of the reasons why I’m glad I married you,” he said softly. As Marisa finally felt her husband returning to normalcy for the first time in a while, he left her and got a few tools to melt the parts of the meteor he had. Marisa watched, now annoyed, and after a matter of minutes Kalmin had a liquid-like substance in front of him inside a metal pot.

    “You’re welcome,” Marisa said in a monotonous voice as Kalmin rushed over to the computer to scan what was in the pot. “You know, I could’ve gotten pregnant by someone else without you knowing.”

    Kalmin let out an “Uh-hun,” noise and waved his hand around a bit, which let Marisa know he wasn’t listening at all. As Marisa as about to say another snide comment, Kalmin’s hand fell to the table and she saw his mouth drop open.

    “Oh my god… you have to come look at this,” Kalmin said, waving his hand to beckon his wife towards him. Marisa grunted and got up from her chair, holding her stomach with one hand. She walked as fast as she could to the computer, her walk being like that of a baby Piplup’s: wobbly and a bit crooked. As she turned the corner of the desk, she already noticed a difference of what was now displaying on the screen. Instead of a bunch of multicolored dots, there were now rows of them, and each row was only one color each.

    “That’s amazing,” Marisa told her husband, “Now, I’m going to bed. Once again, you’re welcome.”

    When Kalmin didn’t reply, his wife let out a quiet noise of disgust and waddled out of the lab.

    Now, Kalmin stood at the computer screen alone, staring at the rows of colors. He took his time and counted the number of different colors there were: seven. There were a few rows of pink, some silver, black, gray, blue, red, and purple. It amazed him at how melting the meteor produced this, and never imagined to come to this outcome.

    “I don’t believe this,” Kalmin gasped after carefully removing the black colored row from the rest and scanning it by itself. “Th-this is Pokémon DNA! And I’ve never even seen it before!”

    What is this? Kalmin thought to himself.


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    “You’re doing great Marisa, breathe slowly,” Kalmin said, tired and out of breath as he stood alongside his wife’s hospital bed. It was four in the morning and his wife had gone into labor a little over an hour ago. The two rushed to Eterna City’s Pokémon Center alone, telling everyone at the lab that they’d rather have them stay behind and do more research while they were gone.

    “Looks like you’re dilated two more inches, so that brings you to four,” the Nurse Joy said to Marisa, smiling happily and throwing out her rubber gloves.

    “Thanks,” Marisa said, heavily out of breath from her most recent contraction. “How many until more inches until the baby’s going to come?”

    “About six, so I’ll come check on you in an hour to see how you’re doing.” Nurse Joy smiled her always-cheerful smile and walked out of the room.

    “Why don’t you try to get some rest?” Kalmin suggested to his wife. “I’m going to go to the bathroom. You’re cell is on the table here, so call me if something happens.”

    “Okay,” his wife said, already beginning to close her eyes. Kalmin smiled and casually walked out of the room.

    It’s finally time, he thought as he strode through the bland, tiled hallways in the hospital. Not very many lights were on in the hallways since most patients were sleeping, and the lights that were on were dimmed. The noises from Kalmin’s shoes echoed while he walked, and they were only joined a few times by occasional passing nurses as he walked to the bathroom.

    Once he was in the bathroom, he rushed inside the stall farthest from the door, quickly closing and locking it. As he was in the stall, he removed his leather coat and hung it across the top of the stall before pulling out a tiny container only about five inches tall from his pocket. Inside was a pure black liquid, the same he had been studying for a month now after finding that the tiny colored particles of the meteor joined together once they were melted. He had decided to keep that fact a secret from everyone, as he wanted to study and be credited with the findings by himself. Instead, he told his wife and everyone else on the research team that melting the meteor only ruined what that had found.

    So the group wasted their time studying something that they knew nothing about while Kalmin researched the DNA that was created by the melting of the part of the meteor. His plans were to hopefully have the DNA he had in the container to join with his child’s DNA and see what happened from there. He set the small cylinder on top of a shelf in the stall and reached into his coat pocket that hung over the stall wall and pulled out a syringe filled with a clear liquid.

    Thank God I found this solution that can make the DNA look like water, Kalmin said in his head, quickly mixing the two liquids inside the syringe. In a minute, the black liquid had completely fused with the clear one to form an all-clear solution inside the syringe. Kalmin put the syringe inside his coat pocket after putting the coat back on and discarded the empty cylinder. He casually walked out of the bathroom and back to his wife. Luckily for him, she was asleep and Nurse Joy wasn’t due to check back for another forty-five minutes.

    “I’m sorry I couldn’t tell you about this,” Kalmin whispered to his sleeping wife, “but if you want our son to be something the world has never experienced then you should thank me if you ever find out what I’m about to do.”

    Kalmin walked to Marisa’s bedside and gently stroked her cheek with his fingers. She looked so beautiful, despite the sweat-covered hair that clung to her forehead and the gross smell that was coming from her mouth as she breathed. Kalmin turned to her IV pole and carefully pulled out the syringe. He stuck the very tip of the needle into the top of the bag and injected the contents of the syringe into it. The clear solution matched perfectly with the water inside the IV bag, which made Kalmin smile a slightly wicked smile that had never appeared on his mouth before. It felt strange for Kalmin, but it also made him smile even more.

    “Excuse me,” Kalmin heard from behind him, making him turn around, startled, “it’s time for me to give your wife some medication to help during the labor. It’ll just flush out anything in her system she might have been taking like for sleep medication or cold medicine as to not harm the baby during the delivery.”

    Kalmin smiled his now-wicked smile at Nurse Joy, who was holding a small orange pill her hand and a glass of water in the other.

    “Uh, she’s asleep right now, can she take it later?” Kalmin asked, a bit nervous that the pill would eliminate the DNA he had injected into his wife’s IV bag.

    “I’d rather her take it now, just in case it doesn’t get all through her system by the tame the baby’s ready to come.” Nurse Joy smiled and started to walk over to Marisa.

    “No, really, I’ll make sure to give it to her when she wakes up,” Kalmin said, stepping to the side to be right in front of Nurse Joy.

    “She needs to take it now,” Nurse Joy said, becoming upset. She quickly stepped to the side, but so did Kalmin.

    “I’ll give it to her.”

    “Sir, no, she needs it now,” Joy went to step to the side again, but Kalmin forcefully grabbed her wrists, causing the water to spill a little. He squeezed them and held her in place.

    “Give me the d*mn medicine and I’ll give it to her when she wakes up.” Nurse Joy let out a small cry of protest and a few tears slid down her cheeks as Kalmin was hurting her. She pushed away from him and opened her hand so he could take the pill. Once he did, she gave him the water and grabbed one of her wrists, which was now bruised.

    “I-I’ll be back in t-twenty minutes,” she said before crying a bit more and leaving. Kalmin smiled even though he knew what he had just done was wrong and really out of line. Once Nurse Joy was down the hall and around the corner, Kalmin put the pill on the ground and smashed it with his foot. Once it was a fine powder, her lightly brushed it under the bed and drank the water himself.


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    Nurse Joy reentered Marisa’s room with a half-scared, half-happy expression on her face. Marisa smiled back at her and subconsciously rubbed her stomach. Nurse Joy walked to the side of the bed and got a small box of plastic gloves from a side table. As she was putting them on, Marisa gasped.

    “What happened to your wrists!? Are you okay?” She rubbed her stomach with one hand while placing her other on Nurse Joy’s wrist. Joy chanced a quick look at Kalmin, who just glared back at her.

    “I-It’s nothing,” she muttered, gently shaking off Marisa’s hand and pulling two gloves onto her hands. After examining Marisa, Nurse Joy smiled a true, happy smile. “Well, you’re ready.”

    Kalmin and Marisa both looked at each other. “R-Really?!” Marisa asked. Nurse Joy nodded and began to take Marisa into the delivery room. Kalmin said goodbye to her as she was wheeled off, and he went into the lobby of the Pokémon Center to wait until his baby boy was born.


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    It only took a year and four months later until Kalmin finally had his answer. After his son was born on December 16, 1991, Kalmin couldn’t wait to run tests on him and find out whether or not Justin’s DNA had combined with the DNA he injected into Marisa’s IV bag that day in the hospital. He tried to test his son’s DNA, but there were only small signs of anything strange, so he had to wait until Justin was older to see if anything developed. Kalmin already tested his wife for any signs of having the DNA, but the tests turned up negative. Because he did not want to look suspicious, Kalmin agreed with his wife about having a nanny watch their son during the days they were working. Kalmin quietly sat back while he waited for his chance to learn whether or not his son’s DNA was altered. During his waiting, all four of the women on his research team had become pregnant. It shocked him that all four of them wanted a child, though he was also thrilled that if the experiment on his son was a success, he would be able to alter the DNA of each child the women were carrying.

    His chance never came, though, as their nanny was rarely sick, and if she were, Marisa would stay home and force Kalmin to go to work. But enough was enough, and he had to find out about his son’s DNA so he could know what he had to improve on to move forward in his research. So instead of waiting for a day his nanny was sick, he called her early one morning and said she didn’t have to come in that day. Since he was technically her boss, she certainly didn’t argue, and when he lied to Marisa that the nanny called in sick at the last minute, they had no choice but to bring little Justin to work with them. Kalmin quickly got his chance when Marisa went to the bathroom to take a bit of Justin’s blood and enter it into the machine on his computer. He didn’t need much blood, just a little prick on the finger and he had enough.

    By the time his wife was back from her trip to the bathroom, the results were completed. On the computer screen was a complete picture of the tiny sample of his son’s DNA. Kalmin examined it for traces of the Pokémon’s DNA as Marisa took Justin to her desk. After he looked through the whole double helix structure that was his son’s DNA, he found exactly what he had hoped – the Pokémon DNA took up exactly half of the DNA contained in his son without altering anything physical. So, in his extreme happiness Kalmin took out the other DNA he had extracted from the meteor. With only a few enhancers and the clear liquid to make it look like water added, they were all complete and ready to change the other babies that would be born later in the year.

    “All right everyone, I just found out that there is a new disease that’s spreading around, and I need to vaccinate you guys,” Kalmin called to everyone, “So, I’ll take the ladies first since they’re all pregnant and will get the rest of you tomorrow.”

    Soon enough, Gwen, Carly, Wanda, and Marisa were all at his desk waiting to be injected with what they thought was a vaccination.

    “How come I haven’t heard of this new disease?” Gwen asked Kalmin before he injected her.

    “I-It’s just spreading through the Johto region now, and I’m only taking precautions,” Kalmin lied.

    “What’s it called?” the four women seemed to ask at once.

    “U-Uh… it’s the… the Swinub Flu,” Kalmin quickly made up as he pulled up Gwen’s sleeve and put the needle into her vein. Once he was finished, the others silently got their injections and were on their way.

    My experiments are finally going to change the world! Soon everyone will know that Kalmin Emera altered the way we all live our lives!


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    Not even a week after his success of combining Pokémon and human DNA were things already beginning to go downhill. It all began exactly five days after Kalmin told his nanny to take the day off. It was right after he called home to see how things were that the police began banging on the double doors into the research lab. Kalmin opened the doors for them, his heart beating rapidly.

    “Can I help you, officers?” he asked as they pushed their way through, not saying a word. “Hey, you can’t just barge in here like that!”

    “Yes, we can,” the first police officer told him. The other held up a folded piece of blue paper.

    “We have a warrant to search the facility for any strange use of materials,” she said, handing the paper to Kalmin. As he read what was on it, the two Officer Jennys continued through the narrow hallway that lead into the one-room research lab. Kalmin followed them, trying to understand what was going on. The first Jenny told everyone in the room to stop what they were doing and walk to the back of the room, which they did.

    “May I please ask WHAT THE H*LL YOU’RE DOING?!” Kalmin yelled as they began to rummage through things.

    “Being in the back of the room includes you,” the first Jenny also told Kalmin. He backed away and stood next to his wife as the Officer continued speaking. “We got word from a Nurse Joy at the local Pokémon Center that she saw you-” Jenny paused to point at Kalmin “- injected some sort of liquid into your wife’s IV bag during the time she spent in the Center.”

    “What?!” Marisa said, alarmed. Kalmin froze, remembering the Nurse Joy who he’d threatened. “What is she talking about?”

    “It’s nothing,” Kalmin said, glaring at Jenny.

    “This doesn’t look like nothing,” he heard the second Officer Jenny say from across the room at his desk. She was holding one of the syringes Kalmin had clumsily left out after “vaccinating” the pregnant woman the previous week. As she continued going through Kalmin’s papers, the other Officer walked over and began going through the computer files.

    “What the hell is going on, Kalmin?” Gwen asked.

    “Yeah, what’d you really inject into us?” Wanda joined in. Kalmin gulped, trying to remain calm.

    “I told you, it was a vaccination.”

    “Hey, Jenny,” Gwen called across the room, “is there a such thing as a ‘Swinub Flu?’”

    “No, not that I’ve heard of,” Jenny replied, not looking away from the computer screen. After a minute of silence, she muttered something to her partner and they were both looking at Kalmin’s computer files. Another minute passed and they walked back over to him and the seven other researchers.

    “Kalmin Emera, you’re under arrest for the possession of potentially harmful materials, illegal documents from the National History and Study of Pokémon DNA Organization, and running an illegal practice without court permission,” the first Jenny said, turning Kalmin around and putting handcuffs around his wrists, “You have the right to remain silent. Anything you say can and will be used against you in a court of law. If you cannot afford an attorney, the court will provide you with one.”

    The second Jenny took over as the first proceeded to take Kalmin out of the room.

    “This facility will now be shut down, and all work will be terminated once the police investigate what you have all worked on. I’m going to have to ask you all to leave, and if you protest or attempt to come back into this facility, you will be arrested as well.”

    Kalmin’s seven colleagues abided by what she was saying and left the room, all in shock of what Kalmin had been hiding from them.

    And even now, the suffering still hasn’t begun.


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    How could he do something so vile? This is excellent stuff, BA. I was pretty surprised to see that Cole's, Kira's, and Dillon's parents were all involved with Kalmin... I have the feeling this is going to have a huge impact on The Sapphire Story.
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    I haven't actually read 'The Sapphire Story' so I'm going to review the story based on its own merits, as someone who wouldn't understand how this connects to the other story. This means that there will probably be comments about parts of the plot that might have been clear if I had read 'The Sapphire Story'. With that out of the way, let's take a look at the story itself:

    Many say that death of violence is a horrible way to leave this world. But if one person's death is the result of violence and no one mourns upon the death... is it really considered horrible?
    I'll try not to go too much into the spelling and grammar department since your beta is still correcting the story (As of the time of me writing this review) so I'll try to just comment on things I feel I need to comment on rather than go out of my way to search for mistakes.

    That said, my problem with this particular bit has more to do with the writing style. What I mean to say is that I find the wording of the first sentence a bit weird. I just can't really tell if by death of violence you are reffering to a violent death or death due to an act of violence or in a time of violence, i.e. a war. Due to the generalized outlook of the first part I think youmean the former one but I'm not entirely sure. I'd suggest that you check the wording in that part make it clearer.

    Death - it is a natural, inevitable force of destiny that happens to each living thing on the planet. No one can escape the shadow-lined souls that steal the lives of others, sending them into the eternal realm of happiness. This realm... all is well, the evils of the world being banished away. No one worries of the ones you loved leaning into the side of darkness – those who have lent into the darkness before death are damned into the other eternal realm of afterlife;
    All the underlined bits are beefs I have with the wording, more than anything.

    The first one, This realm. You are describing the state of the realm. While what you're doing is correct, and it may just be because of your writing style, the wording just seems a bit off. If it's intentional you can feel free to just ignore this. If it isn't, might I suggest an alternative like In this realm, which flows just a bit better with the rest of the sentence.

    The next two, of and you loved are related so I'll treat them like a single case. First of all, I'd suggest changing of to about since it makes more sense in context and it makes the sentence flow better. As for the second one, you loved, I think you should change it to something like they love since the paragraph is speaking in generalized terms about a timeless occurance, that is... an event that has happened and will continue to happen.

    Now on to the last one, lent. I, personally, think that the word lent alone doesn't really work in this sentence. There are two alternatives for this scenario: You can either add to it or replace it. If you want to add to it just change lent into to something like lent themselves to. If you'd rather replace you can change it to something like, for example fell into (This is just an example, mind you, I think there are much better alternatives than the word fell). Of course, if you like it just the way it is then don't change it, all I'm doing is giving suggestions.

    The sound from the digital clock was loud compared to the silence in the shadow-covered room. A single light shining from the rectangular computer screen on a young man’s desk emitted enough light to see a few feet around the room. The young professor had navy-blue hair, which he swept back behind his ears. He crouched over his desk, reading an old article about a legendary Pokémon from outer space. It was written by Brittany May, one of his former colleagues – she used to study ancient legends of Pokémon that are said to have mystical powers and she also wrote many articles for newspapers about them. She even dated him for a while, but they broke up after she caught him with his current lover.
    More wording suggestions. In this sentence you are basically saying that light is emitting light. There are ways to make the sentence sound less redundant, like focusing more on the computer screen.

    Let's change the sentence a bit to show you what I mean:

    A rectangular computer screen was shining bright enough to illuminate a few feet around it.

    This example assumes that there is light coming from the computer, rather than outright stating it. It also eliminates the fact that the computer is on a desk since this piece of information seemed irrelevant. Of course, this is an example. Depending on what you want to focus on or what information you want to present to the reader, there are much better alternatives. However, how you want to change it, or if you even want to change it, is all up to you.

    Kalmin approached the steps and stopped for a moment, taking a deep breath of fresh air. Charmander – who had gone unnoticed by many of the people that Kalmin walked by – did the same and wondered what the two were doing. Once Kalmin surveyed the park, they began up the steps and walked over to the statues. All three of them were awe-inspiring and made of gold, their huge figures towering Kalmin by a good four feet. He saw photos in history books of the statues, but never got to actually see them for himself. These statues of Dialga, Palkia, and Giratina were built in their honor after their legendary fight in Sinnoh thousands of years ago. Kalmin examined each one in awe and read their descriptions too.
    This is just a very minor thing but... wasn't there only one statue? Is there some significance to there being three? Granted I only played the games so I don't know if you're basing it on some other canon.

    “You’re doing great Marisa, breath slowly,” Kalmin said, tired and out of breath as he stood alongside his wife’s hospital bed. It was four in the morning and his wife had gone into labor a little over an hour ago. The two rushed to Eterna City’s Pokémon Center alone, telling everyone at the lab that they’d rather have them stay behind and do more research while they were gone.
    Why would they go to the Pokémon Center to have their baby delivered? I'd like to think it's called a Pokémon Center for a reason. I'd just like to ask why use a Pokémon Center instead of a Hospital, out of curiosity.

    Kalmin walked to Marisa’s bedside and gently stroked her cheek with his fingers. She looked so beautiful, despite the sweat-covered hair that clung to her forehead and the gross smell that was coming from her mouth as she breathed. Kalmin turned to her IV pole and carefully pulled out the syringe. He stuck the very tip of the needle into the top of the bag and injected the contents of the syringe into it. The clear solution matched perfectly with the water inside the IV bag, which made Kalmin smile a slightly wicked smile that had never appeared on his mouth before. It felt strange for Kalmin, but it also made him smile even more.
    I've got to say, when I first read through the story I didn't like the transition to evil Kalmin because I thought there was no build-up to it. It wasn't until the second time I read through it (For review purposes) that I saw the very subtle hints at Kalmin's true personality. I really appreciate how you didn't throw the fact that he was evil at the reader's face. For all I know it might have helped not to have read The Sapphire Story to appreciate this little twist.

    Now that that's out of the way, there is one thing that really bugs me about this paragraph. Why would smiling make you smile? I mean, if he's busy implementing the plan he has been setting up for the last month I don't think he would be horribly self-concious of the way he's grinning. Even if he knew how he was grinning I don't see why this fact would make him smile even more. Meh, it's just a minor detail I decided to bring up.

    Although if we delved deeper into this, I don't see why he'd be smiling wickedly in the first place. This guy genuinely seems to think that what he's doing is good and is going to change the world. It's only to the readers that his actions seem wrong and evil. Bringing up the first point, while getting to this point his true personality was shown in a subtle manner, at the precise point where it's revealed it's thrown right into the reader's faces. I'd understand if he was terribly excited that his plan has finally come to fruition but he still manages to be suspiciously careful through all of this. Now don't get me wrong, I understand that people can be careful about things when they're excited. What I'm trying to say is that I can't tell wether the smile is to show how excited he is or to blatantly tell the reader how evil he is.

    Please excuse this rant but the whole thing seemed so blatant in comparison to the way it had been handled up to this point.

    Kalmin’s seven apprentices abided by what she was saying and left the room, all in shock of what Kalmin had been hiding from them.

    And even now, the suffering still hasn’t begun.
    Apprentices? I thought they were colleagues. Naybe I missed it but I can't recall them being called his apprentices prior to this moment. Meh, but that's just minor nit-picking.

    The ending doesn't leave much closure either but I guess it works since this one-shot is a tie-in with the other story, I guess I'll have to read it later.

    Anyway, I'd like to bring up one last minor nit-pick before closing off. I'd like to ask, out of curiosity, what is the relevance of the little 'death' monologue at the beginning? Maybe I need to read 'The Sapphire Story' to understand it but since there is no death and very little violence it seems somewhat unrelated. Even this part...

    It's almost obvious when someone is destined for the underworld consumed in a never-ending acrimony of flames. These tainted souls of evil walk among us in hopes of gaining something from the very loss of others. When they achieve their goal, it only means that someone has suffered to the inners of their twisted hearts.
    ... doesn't make much sense in context becaus Kalmin doesn't appear to be trying to gain anything through the loss of others as he deems that his life-changing actions are positive .

    In the end, it's not a bad one-shot but I guess it'd be less confusing if I read the story it's tied to. Oh well, I was asking for it by reading the one-shot first. I didn't see too many mistakes while looking through the story, and they were minor enough that I'm sure they'll be fixed in the beta-ed version (hence why I'm not listing them in this review). Anyway, this review represents my opinion and nothing more so feel free to ignore it if you find it unhelpful.

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    Many say that death of violence is a horrible way to leave this wolrd.
    Wolrd should be world. That is all I found and other then that, it was great! It is very interesting especially since it has every one's parents before they were pregnant. (Cole's, Kira's, Dillon's) Keep up the great work!
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    Quote Originally Posted by SOS
    How could he do something so vile? This is excellent stuff, BA. I was pretty surprised to see that Cole's, Kira's, and Dillon's parents were all involved with Kalmin... I have the feeling this is going to have a huge impact on The Sapphire Story.
    Yeah, all the parents knew each other prior to TSS, and this OS will definately have a huge impact on TSS in terms of plot advancement and stuff.

    Rippingthunder, you definately put a lot of effort into your review for someone who hasn't read The Sapphier Story >< But I do applaud you for that and appreciate that you would review this entirely on the fact that this is its own story.

    I understand about the first little intriductive narration part, and even I think that the wording is strange. I wrote that back in December or January, and I don't know what I where I was trying to get with that. I think I was actually going to have Kalmin kill people(like the Nurse Joy), but as I wrote more of this I changed the plotline a bit. I even read and reread those first parts and didn't know how to change them. So yes, even I felt that it was confusing and the wording was strange, which is why I'm getting rid of it. I sort of agreed with myself that if anyone complained about it or thought it was unneeded I would just delete it. So, yeah.

    When I read what you were saying about the computer screen giving off light, I didn't quite agree with you, but as I just went back and read it again, I see what you're talking about. And I would use your example, provided you allowed me to, but it doesn't fit with the next sentence because of the way I had it; my version of the sentence quietly introduced Kalmin, and the next one continued on with the fact that there was a young professor at the desk. Your sentence makes it a little confusing, which is why I changed it from: "A single light shining from the rectangular computer screen on a young man’s desk emitted enough light to see a few feet around the room." to: "A rectangular computer screen on a young man's desk was shining bright enough to illuminate a few feet around it." -I hope you don't mind that I just added "on a young man's desk" to your example.

    The paragraph where I have three statues instead of just one like in the games was just what I felt like doing. You know how in some games ther ewill be different things based on the game's mascot? Well I jsut thought I would have all three statues there since it sort of symbolizes Cole, Kira, and Dillon (the protagonists in The Sapphire Story) later appearing in this fiction. So yeah, that was a part where reading TSS would've made it a bit more understandable ;)

    I used a Pok&#233;mon Center instead of a hospital because I always thought of the Centers as places for both people and Pok&#233;mon. I don't remember any hospitals for people in the games or anim&#233;, and I'm not fond of adding more real-life characteristics to my fictions since they're all Pok&#233;mon-based. And how you said that it's a Pok&#233;mon Center, it also has a Nurse Joy, and a nurse should also be able to help humans as well :P

    How could smiling make you smile? I honeslty do not know, but my reasoning for that part was just becuase I wanted the readers to see how he noticed himself sort of slipping over to what people commonly call "the dark side." But I'm glad you could catch some of the small hints of Kalmin transitioning from (like I sort of said before) "good to evil." The sole purpose of this One-Shot was to show my readers (the ones that read The Sapphire Story) how the main characters are connected, how the became the way they are, and how the major antagonist came to be.

    Yes yes yes! I seriously could not think of the word 'colleagues' to replace apprentices. I'll definately change that right now since I have the word I was looking for :)

    And yeah, the ending doesn't leave much closure since this does tie-in with TSS. My writing style is sort of likw how Star Wars works - I build up questions in my readers as I write and then sort of get all their answers out in certain parts of the story. I know it's not the smartest way to write, but I don't think there is any other way this could be written. You might understand things better if you read TSS, but that's entirely up to you. Thanks for the review.

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    When I read what you were saying about the computer screen giving off light, I didn't quite agree with you, but as I just went back and read it again, I see what you're talking about. And I would use your example, provided you allowed me to, but it doesn't fit with the next sentence because of the way I had it; my version of the sentence quietly introduced Kalmin, and the next one continued on with the fact that there was a young professor at the desk. Your sentence makes it a little confusing, which is why I changed it from: "A single light shining from the rectangular computer screen on a young man’s desk emitted enough light to see a few feet around the room." to: "A rectangular computer screen on a young man's desk was shining bright enough to illuminate a few feet around it." -I hope you don't mind that I just added "on a young man's desk" to your example.
    I don't mind.

    The paragraph where I have three statues instead of just one like in the games was just what I felt like doing. You know how in some games ther ewill be different things based on the game's mascot? Well I jsut thought I would have all three statues there since it sort of symbolizes Cole, Kira, and Dillon (the protagonists in The Sapphire Story) later appearing in this fiction. So yeah, that was a part where reading TSS would've made it a bit more understandable
    I understand. As I said in the review it's a minor detail. The reason I mentioned it is because, if I recall correctly, Giratina is not exactly general knowledge.

    I used a Pokémon Center instead of a hospital because I always thought of the Centers as places for both people and Pokémon. I don't remember any hospitals for people in the games or animé, and I'm not fond of adding more real-life characteristics to my fictions since they're all Pokémon-based. And how you said that it's a Pokémon Center, it also has a Nurse Joy, and a nurse should also be able to help humans as well :P
    Yes, this was just some minor nit-picking on my part because in your story you could have replaced Pokémon Center with Hospital and it still would have been the same. I understand your reasons not to but it was just a comment, the story works fine with or without the change.

    How could smiling make you smile? I honeslty do not know, but my reasoning for that part was just becuase I wanted the readers to see how he noticed himself sort of slipping over to what people commonly call "the dark side." But I'm glad you could catch some of the small hints of Kalmin transitioning from (like I sort of said before) "good to evil." The sole purpose of this One-Shot was to show my readers (the ones that read The Sapphire Story) how the main characters are connected, how the became the way they are, and how the major antagonist came to be.
    Yeah, I understand that. It's just that in the paragraph I mentioned he probably would've been a bit more concerned that everything went according to plan. I think that a much better place to insert him noticing his transition to the dark side would have been just a bit below the mentioned paragraph, when he himself notices that he's crossing the line. But I digress, it's just that the way it was worded and the moment it's inserted into seem a bit strange. But it works anyway so all I'm doing is giving my two cents on the whole situation.

    And yeah, the ending doesn't leave much closure since this does tie-in with TSS. My writing style is sort of likw how Star Wars works - I build up questions in my readers as I write and then sort of get all their answers out in certain parts of the story. I know it's not the smartest way to write, but I don't think there is any other way this could be written. You might understand things better if you read TSS, but that's entirely up to you. Thanks for the review.
    Oh no, not Star Wars! Does this mean I'm going to have to read five books to understand a minor plot point? Stupid Expanded Universe...

    After reading this I'm also planning to read The Sapphire Story. But I'm going to take my time with that since some chapters seem to be relatively long (not that I mind).

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    It was funny that each person on the team was married to someone else on the team – Okmis and Gwen Mascheriet, Kevin and Carly Harte, Wanda and Bryon Marly, and he a Marisa Emera.
    Am I the only one that suspected that Kamlin might have been Cole's dad until reading this? By some reason, I imagined a darth-vader-styled revelation later in TSS, but knowing the contrary is a surprise that I'm thaking you for, man.

    Talking about fatherhood, what are you planning to do with Justin? If you develop a character under his circumstances well, that alone could be good enough to give you the next fic of the year award.

    P.D.1: the same goes for Marisa Emera and Brittany May, the earlier for her reaction to what her husband did to her, and the latter for seeing how she would react to the story; if your planning on let her know; that is

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    Wow, I certainly did love that OS, BA. It was expertly written, with beautiful words. This will surely have an impact on the Sapphire Story.

    One thing I noticed, at the end you switched from past to present tense, 'But the suffering hasn't begun'. Was that intentional? If it was, you've certainly got me thinking!
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    Rippingthunder:

    Quote Originally Posted by RT
    Oh no, not Star Wars! Does this mean I'm going to have to read five books to understand a minor plot point? Stupid Expanded Universe...
    Haha, no, the plot and the things involved will be concluded at the end of each Fic, and a new plot will take place during in beginning of the sequels ^^;

    Quote Originally Posted by RT
    After reading this I'm also planning to read The Sapphire Story. But I'm going to take my time with that since some chapters seem to be relatively long (not that I mind).
    Alright, I'm glad I've got a new reader :)

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    Quote Originally Posted by AS
    Am I the only one that suspected that Kamlin might have been Cole's dad until reading this? By some reason, I imagined a darth-vader-styled revelation later in TSS, but knowing the contrary is a surprise that I'm thaking you for, man.
    Yup yup.

    Quote Originally Posted by AS
    Talking about fatherhood, what are you planning to do with Justin? If you develop a character under his circumstances well, that alone could be good enough to give you the next fic of the year award.
    Well he's already been introduced in The Sapphire Story as his current seventeen-year-old self. I believe it was in Chapter Ten that he was first seen talking to Samari. His major "debut" will be in Chapter Twenty-One. And thanks for saying I could get the Fic of the Year award, that means a lot to me.

    Quote Originally Posted by AS
    P.D.1: the same goes for Marisa Emera and Brittany May, the earlier for her reaction to what her husband did to her, and the latter for seeing how she would react to the story; if your planning on let her know; that is
    First off, what's "P.D.1"? Anyway, Marisa won't be introduced at all in TSS of its sequels, but she will have a OS about her history and stuff. As for Brittany, she will never appear again at all.

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    Quote Originally Posted by TF
    Wow, I certainly did love that OS, BA. It was expertly written, with beautiful words. This will surely have an impact on the Sapphire Story.
    Thank you, this definately has an impact on TSS since it gives the backstory as to why things are the way they are :D

    Quote Originally Posted by TF
    One thing I noticed, at the end you switched from past to present tense, 'But the suffering hasn't begun'. Was that intentional? If it was, you've certainly got me thinking!
    Yes it was since this carries onto The Sapphire Story ^^


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    Like I said in the other chapter, nice twist on the whole legendary powers thing. Usually the main characters would be chosen by one, but instead it is of Kalimn's doing.

    One thing I want to point out is there were a couple parts where you made Kalimn...a cheesy villain.

    “We finally did it Charmander,” Kalmin said, noticing his partner looking at him, “we finally found what Deoxys brought to our planet from outer space - soon we’ll be rich from this discovery!”
    My experiments are finally going to change the world! Soon everyone will know that Kalmin Emera altered the way we all live our lives!
    Those lines would be as if a cartoon villain would say it. -_-

    One other thing I want to point out is why the Charmander is never mentioned again?

    Another concern is in this one shot, both Cole and Kira's mom know each other, but in the chaptered fic seems the two didn't. I guess they forgot about each other? Or maybe it's me forgetting the two actually know each other in The Sapphire Story. >.>;

    My last concern is how Kalimn able to command Team Aqua and Team Magma, but I guess that will be mentioned later.

    All in all, an interesting one shot, despite my rants from The Sapphire Story. ^^;


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    *hopes this is okay since it's an update*

    Okay, sorry for never responding >< And btw, the beta-ed version has been edited in... dunno if I ever announced that or not :P

    Quote Originally Posted by Bay
    Those lines would be as if a cartoon villain would say it. -_-
    Really? Oh, well I was mostly having him say them out of excitement, not evil xP

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    One other thing I want to point out is why the Charmander is never mentioned again?
    I dunno xD But it will be in TSS, so don't worry.

    Quote Originally Posted by Bay
    Another concern is in this one shot, both Cole and Kira's mom know each other, but in the chaptered fic seems the two didn't. I guess they forgot about each other? Or maybe it's me forgetting the two actually know each other in The Sapphire Story. >.>;
    If you noticed in TSS, Kira and Cole were the only two who know both mothers, and Gwen and Carly never actually went over to the other's house. And since the two were still pregnant in this OS when it ended and their group disbanded, they don't know what the other had or anything. I'll have a chapter in TSS where they meet - like I said, don;t worry, all of this will come together >< I'm not sure when they will meet exactly, since Cole's mom is still on her little "adventures" with Norman xD

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    All in all, an interesting one shot, despite my rants from The Sapphire Story. ^^;
    >< Thanks.

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