I just can't belive how mean you are, making us wait until the next chapter for cheeseball and the captain.
However, the meme using pokedex was the highlight of the awesome(of awesomeness)chapter.
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However, the meme using pokedex was the highlight of the awesome(of awesomeness)chapter.
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Meowth, dat's right!
Think I'll do just that.Originally Posted by Skydra
I just might have overdone it on the anime stuff, yeah. I just had that particular episode on the brain when I was writing up this chapter.
He's not really that self-centered, just easily angered. Besides, between the Nugget Bridge Team Rocket recruiter's stupidity and the general idiocy of Jessie, James, and Meowth, Jack just wanted to kick some Team Rocket ***. And of course, Team Rocket grunts in those numbers, even Jack would realize he'd need a little help on that.
Oh, don't worry. The next chapter will be right back to the hilarious stuff you've come to expect from this story. I already have a few ideas for the Cheeseball battle, and as I'm typing this, I already have a little idea in mind for the whole thing with the captain.
If I can implement half the ideas I'm cooking up right now, it'll be well worth the wait.
What can I say? Jack's Pokédex is in the top percentage of Pokédexes.
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I'd have to agree with Skydra on this and say this chapter had more anime references than humor in it, which kind of decreased it's enjoyability. That and I had had a nasty feeling throughout the majority of the chapter that Jack would accidentally trade the wrong Pokemon *coughRayquazacough* and have to get it back.
But it was still pretty enjoyable and CHEESEBALL!!!!!!!!!!
Also, the Zoroark idea could still fool us. If you play it correctly and we somehow forget over the next 5-6 months.
No it's not! The chapter title for Chapter 6 was "The Sixth Chapter"!
More bad grammer people! I miss the bad grammer robot..."Ahoy there," said the sailor. "Welcome to the S.S. Anne! Do you got your ticket?"
Leafgreen is better!"Have you ever played FireRed version?" demanded the Pokédex.
Wow, Jack really does care about his Pokemon."Well, to be perfectly honest with you," replied Jack, "Your Raticate's also really good, but I'd rather get drenched in steak sauce and thrown into a river full of starving Carvanha than trade away my Weezing.
So now Jack's gonna have to catch another Water type to Surf to Cinnabar."I promise you I'll take good care of Octillery," said the man, as he took his new Poké Ball. "Do take care of Raticate for me."
Oh, I can guess how the next chapter's gonna turn out:"Meaning, at the risk of dragging up a variation of a horribly overused meme, your Raticate is in the top percentage of Raticate," stated the Pokédex.
Spoiler:- My prediction for next chapter:
o_O How many Bulbasaur does Prof. Oak have?As other trainers threw their own Poké Balls, Jack's Ivysaur materialized in front of him. Almost instantly, numerous flashes of light revealed dozens of other Ivysaur.
EVIL!!!!!End Chapter 13. Yeah, I'm evil, making you wait till the next chapter for the battle.
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Hey, I was just thinking something. Jack likes poison pokemon, right? So, for his water type surfing pokemon, have him get a tentacruel or something! Maybe not such a good idea but I think it could work!
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Yeah, I agree, I sort of overdid it with the anime references. It started with a slight reference to Ash trading Butterfree, then since I had that episode on the brain at the time, it exploded into what you read today.
And trust me, the presence of Cheeseball will make the next chapter far better than this one.
It's worth a shot, perhaps.
It's starting to look like the chapter title guy, whatever his other faults, at least had a bit more creativity with chapter titles than the Pokédex.
The robot might not be gone for good.
Not in my opinion. Weezing appear in the wild in FireRed. Koffing are common in FireRed. Weezing do not appear in the wild in LeafGreen. Koffing are somewhat rare in LeafGreen. And since Weezing is my favorite Pokémon, guess which version I prefer.
That, and Weezing's actually becoming his favorite Pokemon, he just hasn't fully realized this yet. In fact, he already stated in that chapter that he's starting to have a preference for Poison-types.
My, how quickly we forget Gyarados. Of course, I could stand to put it in a few more chapters. Its last appearance was when Jack was trying to combat the Bad Egg.
Spoiler:- My answer to your prediction:
Who says they're all from Oak? Perhaps Jack and Cheeseball aren't the only passengers who are fans of Akshun Reeplae.
Yeah, I know. For what it's worth, I'm already typing up the next chapter, and it's looking good. I'll be away for the weekend, so if it's not up today, it'll be up on Halloween or later.
It's not a bad idea, and Jack will be getting more Poison-types in the future. However, you also seem to have forgotten that Jack owns a Gyarados.
Which brings me to something else you can look forward to. You know how annoyed Jack was by those Zubat in Mt. Moon? You know how nauseatingly common Tentacool are on the water? I think you can see where I'm going with this.
Anyway, sorry that this chapter wasn't quite as funny as past chapters. I just had Battle Aboard the St. Anne on my mind when typing it up. I had intended for Jack to get a Raticate for his battle with Cheeseball's Raticate, and this seemed like a decent opportunity. Besides, if you'll notice, I've included anime stuff before. I guarantee you that the next chapter will be hilarious.
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GAH!!!!! THE FOURTH WALL IS SMASHED TO BITS!!!!!!! *attempts to put the fourth wall back together, then stops* Wait, this is a parody story, isn't it? Never mind, then.
It was broken a long time ago, anyways....
I take it the Pokedex has internet access? How else would it know memes? lol."Meaning, at the risk of dragging up a variation of a horribly overused meme, your Raticate is in the top percentage of Raticate," stated the Pokédex.
I like how Jack seems to be a bit more slow to anger and willing to help other people than he was at the beginning of the story. Nice character development.
OH U. grumblegrumblegrumbleEnd Chapter 13. Yeah, I'm evil, making you wait till the next chapter for the battle.
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Ugh, I give up. Completing the Pokedex is too hard. And now there's over a 150 more Pokemon for Generation V? No way.
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Chapter 14: The Battle of Battleness
"Pidgeotto, use Gust!" called Cheeseball.
"Arbok, Glare!" ordered Jack.
Arbok's eyes glowed blue, and it stared straight at Pidgeotto, who absurdly froze in mid-flap. Without its wings flapping to support it, Pidgeotto fell to the ground like a paralyzed Pidgeotto- oh, wait.
Jack rolled his eyes and glared at the Pokédex. "I suck at narrating, and even I know better than to compare something to itself. That's just ridiculous!"
"Gimme a break," snapped the Pokédex. "I haven't gotten to start enjoying my vacation yet!"
"At least you get a vacation!" came a voice from Cheeseball's pants pocket. "It's like every second of every day Cheeseball whips me out to look up some new Pokémon. I could really use a rest. But no, it's Drowzee this, and Dugtrio that. It never ends!"
"Shut up," snapped Cheeseball to his Pokédex. "And stop calling me Cheeseball!"
"Can we get back to the battle?" asked Jack.
"Fine," replied Cheeseball. "Pidgeotto, Wing Attack!"
Pidgeotto struggled to get up, shakily climbed to its feet, then promptly fell over again.
"Finish it with Thunder Fang," Jack yawned. Arbok grinned, baring its fangs, which began crackling with electricity. It then lunged forward, and chomped down on the helpless Pidgeotto, delivering an intense electrical shock. As Arbok let go, Pidgeotto lay on the ground, smoking slightly. Scowling, Cheeseball held out a Poké Ball and recalled Pidgeotto. He then plucked another Poké Ball off his belt and tossed it.
"Kadabra, do it!" called Cheeseball, as the ball opened up to reveal what appeared to be a larger, more awake version of Abra, holding a spoon in its right hand.
"Kadabra, the Psi Pokémon, and the evolved form of Abra," droned Jack's Pokédex. "Kadabra uses psychic power to bend spoons and read minds. This and its humanoid form have made it the subject of several lawsuits from a self-proclaimed psychic. Curiously, Kadabra's psychic power cancels out the radiation emitted by Everstones."
"Huh," said Jack. "How did you get your Abra to evolve, anyway?"
"It wasn't easy," replied Cheeseball. "Kadabra, use Confusion!"
"Kadabra!" exclaimed Kadabra, as its eyes glowed blue. Just then, Arbok took on a blue aura and began floating into the air.
"Chaa?!" hissed Arbok, clearly in a panic.
"Arbok, calm down!" called Jack. "Use Gunk Shot!"
"Don't let it happen, Kadabra!" called Cheeseball. Kadabra tightened its grip on its spoon in response, and Arbok's mouth snapped shut. It emitted muffled hisses frantically, and then Kadabra casually pointed its spoon at the airborne Cobra Pokémon. Immediately, Arbok came crashing down to the floor.
"Alright, Kadabra, finish it with Psybeam!" grinned Cheeseball.
"Arbok, no! Use Glare!" Jack ordered, but it was too late. Kadabra launched from its spoon a multicolored beam of light. The beam struck Arbok dead on, pushing it backwards. Arbok landed at Jack's feet, clearly unconscious.
"Arbok, return!" called Jack, holding out the Poké Ball. As Arbok was sucked back in, Jack took out a new ball and threw it. "Go, Golbat!" In a flash of light, the Bat Pokémon was unleashed. Golbat flapped its wings, keeping it in the air, and narrowed its eyes at the sight of Kadabra.
"Hah! Another Poison-type? When will you learn, Jack?" sneered Cheeseball. "Kadabra, Psybeam!"
"Golbat, Supersonic!" Jack responded.
Golbat nimbly swerved to avoid the oncoming beam of light, then unleashed a volley of soundwaves from its mouth. The effect was immediate; Kadabra immediately began stumbling its way to a wall, where there was a table. Kadabra approached a bowl of some sort of soup, and with its spoon, it started eating the soup.
As Jack and Golbat tried rather halfheartedly not to laugh, Cheeseball screamed, "KADABRA, GET BACK HERE! WE'VE GOT A BATTLE TO WIN!"
"...dabra..." Kadabra mumbled in response, still under the impression that it was time to eat.
"Nice touch, Golbat," Jack muttered. Golbat replied by emitting squeaking cries that sounded more like snickering.
Meanwhile, Cheeseball held out a Poké Ball. "Kadabra, return!" he called. As soon as the red beam had retrieved the Psi Pokémon, Cheeseball threw it back out onto the floor. "Kadabra, go!" he called. In a blast of light, Kadabra re-emerged, no longer confused, a few drops of soup falling from its spoon.
"Damn it!" snapped Jack. "How the hell did it get over its confusion so fast?"
"Returning a Pokémon to its Poké Ball cures confusion, Jack," Cheeseball sneered, now sounding smug again. "Don't you know anything?"
"Yeah, I do," snapped Jack. "I know that Psychic-types are weak against Bug-type attacks! Golbat, Leech Life!"
Golbat immediately swooped down upon Kadabra and sank its fangs in. Almost instantaneously, Kadabra went limp and fell to the ground, releasing its grip on the spoon. Scowling, Cheeseball recalled the unconscious Kadabra (Jack noticed that the spoon, despite no longer being in physical contact with Kadabra, was also sucked into the ball), and threw another ball.
"Raticate! Destroy!" roared Cheeseball, as he threw the ball. In a flash of light, Cheeseball's so-called top-percentage Raticate appeared. It bared its fangs and snarled at Golbat. Jack, however, was smiling.
"Golbat, take a rest," smirked Jack, holding out its Poké Ball. As soon as Golbat was recalled, Jack reattached the ball to his belt, and removed another one, enlarging that one to full size.
"OK, why the weird smile?" asked Cheeseball, looking suspicious.
"Because you claim your Raticate to be in the top percentage of Raticate," responded Jack. Around him, several spectators groaned at the bad meme usage. "Well, now we'll find out for sure!" And he threw the ball. "Poké Ball, go!"
In a flash of light, Jack's newly-acquired Raticate emerged from its ball and landed on the floor, assuming a pose identical to that of Cheeseball's Raticate.
"What?!" exclaimed Cheeseball. "You have a Raticate too!?"
"Not only that, Cheeseball, but mine is also in the top percentage of Raticate. This will prove to be an interesting battle."
"We'll see about that," snarled Cheeseball. "And stop calling me Cheeseball! Raticate, Tackle attack!"
"Raticate, Hi Jump Kick!" called Jack.
"IT CAN'T LEARN THAT!" exclaimed Cheeseball in all caps. However, contrary to what Cheesball said, Jack's Raticate sprang into the air, and decended foot-first. The Hi Jump Kick made contact with Cheeseball's Raticate, sending it flying backwards.
"Raticate, follow up with Ice Beam!" Jack ordered as Cheeseball's Raticate landed on the floor.
"Raticate, dodge it and use Hyper Fang!" replied Cheeseball. Immediately, Cheeseball's Raticate began darting all over the floor, avoiding multiple blasts of icy energy from Jack's Raticate. Seeing an opening, Cheeseball's Raticate sprang forward, fangs bared.
"Quick, Raticate, Giga Impact now!" Jack called out. Instantly, his Raticate began rushing forwards, cloaking itself in a swirl of purple and yellow energy. The two Raticate collided head-on, and remained deadlocked for a moment; then, Jack's Raticate overpowered Cheeseball's, sending it flying backwards and straight into Cheeseball's stomach, knocking him onto the floor. Cheeseball groaned and struggled to his feet, but his Raticate wasn't as lucky; it remained on the ground, clearly knocked out.
"Ugh... Raticate, return," groaned Cheeseball, holding the Poké Ball in one hand and massaging his sore stomach with the other. "Ow, that hurt."
"Raticate, you take a rest as well," smiled Jack, holding out its Poké Ball. Once both Raticate were missing from the field, Cheeseball took out a fourth Poké Ball and threw it.
"Go, Wartortle!" exclaimed Cheeseball. In a flash of light, what at first glance appeared to be a Squirtle materialized, though as the light faded, Jack could see several differences.
Wartortle's skin was a more purpleish tint than it had as a Squirtle, its tail was white and extremely bushy, and its head sported white, pointy ears. It also had a dark blue mark under each of its eyes.
"Wartortle, the Turtle Pokémon, and the evolved form of Squirtle," said Jack's Pokédex. "Wartortle are known to live for hundreds of years. Its large tail is viewed by many as a symbol of longevity."
"Well then," said Jack, taking out a Poké Ball. "Let's see if it lives through this! Weezing, I choose you!"
"NO!" roared Cheeseball. "A guy's hair can only take so much Sludge!"
"Relax," snapped Jack. "I won't tell it to use Sludge this time."
This, however, appeared to not make a difference; as Weezing appeared, it took one look at Cheeseball (two looks, if you count the second head), and immediately blasted a Sludge attack straight at him. Cheeseball ducked, but too late; he slowly got back up a moment later, hair dripping with sludge. Many partygoers started to laugh, and even Weezing started to chuckle.
"Weezing, Thunderbolt!" Jack called.
"Wartortle, Rapid Spin!" exclaimed Cheeseball.
Wartortle drew its head, tail, and limbs into its shell, allowing it to clatter to the floor. The shell then began spinning around rapidly, as the attack's name would imply. The bolt of lightning struck the shell, but the sheer speed at which it was spinning caused the electricity to ricochet off the shell and strike a wall, instead, blasting a hole in it.
"Wartortle, now use Water Gun!" Cheeseball called out. Wartortle sprung back out of its shell and fired off a stream of water from its mouth.
"Weezing, use-" Jack started, but at that moment, Weezing already started an attack. The skull-and-crossbones pattern on Weezing's larger head flashed multiple colors simultaneously, and then launched a multicolored beam of light.
"Woah!" exclaimed Jack. "What the hell?"
"Psybeam," replied the Pokédex. "A powerful Psychic attack that may confuse an opponent."
"What?!" snarled Cheeseball as the Psybeam and the Water Gun collided in midair. "Your Weezing learned Psybeam?! Can it even DO that?!"
"Apparently!" replied Jack. "Weezing, Psybeam! Maximum power!"
"Weezing weez," groaned Weezing, as it intensified the Psybeam's power. Almost instantly, the attack began cutting through the Water Gun, and collided with Wartortle. Wartortle stumbled around for a moment, then fell to the ground and moved no more.
"RRRRGH!" snarled Cheeseball as he recalled Wartortle. "You stinker! And I took it easy on you, too!"
"Sure you did," scoffed Jack. "Just admit I'm a better trainer than you and be done with it."
"Weezing weezing weez," added Weezing's larger head, as its smaller head stuck its tongue out.
"Sorry, Jack, but I have a thing about admitting to complete and total lies," replied Cheeseball. "Anyway, what the heck was happening? I start boarding the ship and all of a sudden I see swarms of Team Rocket grunts fleeing this room!"
"Oh yeah, there was a little situation in here," replied Jack. "But we handled it just fine."
"Well, as long as it's over," said Cheeseball. "What I really came onto the ship for was to see the captain. I heard he was a master swordsman and could teach Pokémon Cut. But he's just a seasick old man. But Cut itself is really quite useful. Maybe you should see him. Anyway, I gotta take my team to the Pokémon Center. Smell ya later!"
With that, Cheeseball left the room, his hair dripping a trail of sludge in his wake.
"Did you hear that?" asked the Pokédex.
"Yeah, that sludge really makes a weird noise when it hits the floor, doesn't it?" replied Jack.
"Not that! What he said about Cut!" exclaimed the Pokédex. "The captain of the S.S. Anne can teach Cut to Pokémon! You can get to Vermilion Gym!"
"Wait a second, I got it!" exclaimed Jack. "The captain of the S.S. Anne can teach Cut to Pokémon! I can get to Vermilion Gym!"
"Why do I put up with him?" muttered the Pokédex.
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Minutes later, Jack arrived at a door labeled "Captain Bilgewater's cabin". He raised a hand and knocked on the door. In response, a hideous retching noise could be heard from within. Jack raised his eyebrows, and cautiously pushed the door open.
Inside the somewhat small room was a portly man leaning over a garbage pail, clutching his sizable stomach.
"Ooooh..." he groaned. "I feel hideous... urp... seasick."
"Anything I can do to help?" asked Jack cautiously. He had a feeling that as long as the captain was feeling seasick, he wouldn't feel up to teaching Cut to one of Jack's Pokémon.
"Ugh... Lad, could I ask you to rub me back for me?" groaned Captain Bilgewater.
"Uh.... Ok," said Jack, trying to conceal a look of extreme disgust, although the captain had his back to him in any case. Jack whipped out his Pokédex and whispered something to it.
"No!" the Pokédex whispered back. "What, do you want me to get sick?"
"You're a machine!" Jack hissed. "How the hell are you gonna get sick?!"
"I could get a virus!" replied the Pokédex.
"Just do it!" snapped Jack.
"OK, OK," grumbled the Pokédex. Silently, he wriggled out of Jack's hand, transformed into a giant fighting robot, and began rubbing Captain Bilgewater's back.
"Ahhhh..." sighed the captain several minutes later. "That be much better! Thanks, laddie!" Before he turned around, the Pokédex quickly resumed its usual form, and landed in Jack's hand.
"So, have ye come to see me Cut technique? I'd show it to ye, but I'm still not feeling a hundred percent..."
"I am NOT rubbing his back again!" the Pokédex hissed to Jack, which went unnoticed by the captain.
"But I feel fine enough to get this voyage underway! It's time for the S.S. Anne to leave Vermilion! Ah, lad, I can't thank ye enough! Maybe this will do."
And he dug into his pants pocket, and pulled out a silver disc. It had a label on it reading "HM01: Cut".
"Here ye go, lad," said the captain. "This HM teaches Cut. Unlike TMs, HMs are good for unlimited uses, so you can use it again and again!"
"Cool, thanks!" exclaimed Jack. "I gotta take my Pokémon to the Pokémon Center, but I'll be right back."
"See that you hurry, lad," replied the captain. Jack rushed out of the cabin, raced off the ship and onto dry land, and dashed the whole way to the Pokémon Center. Ten agonizingly long minutes later, Jack attached the Poké Balls back onto his belt, while running back to the port. Jack arrived at the port just in time to see the S.S. Anne departing.
"STOP THE SHIP!" roared Jack, in all caps, bold, and size three font. But nothing happened.
"Maybe you should have sprung for size five," remarked the Pokédex."
In response, Jack began roaring such a vile string of foul language that three of the sailors on board the ship passed out then and there. People who were waving to the passengers stopped and stared at Jack as he stomped around the port, unleashing such foul expletives from his mouth that no decent person would have the gall to publish them in their entirety. Although Jack was of the opinion that his author had no soul, the Pokédex knew better than to include such language in the narration.
As Jack's curse-laden tirade died down, he turned around to see every living being within fifteen feet of him staring at him, mouths agape.
"WHAT ARE ALL OF YOU LOOKING AT?!" snarled Jack, and with that, he stomped out of the port.
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Read the rest of the story to find out. Glad to see you're interested, though!
You are, I just hadn't gotten the PMs out yet. The forum lag was horrible when I posted this and I had to go somewhere in any case, I only just got back. Seeing as you've obviously already noticed the new chapter, though, I'll skip sending you a PM for this chapter, but you're still on the list, don't worry.
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While the Elite 4 isn't strictly necessary for Jack to rescue the narrator, I haven't ruled it out just yet. I have several ideas so far...
My original idea for this involved Jack asking Weezing to rub the captain's back instead, and they start arguing, which escalates into a full-blown brawl, all while the captain is barfing into the garbage can and therefore not noticing. I think this one was funnier, though.I knew you'd never let me down.
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Cheeseball's Pokedex gets used too much whereas Jack's Pokedex gets cut off midsentence."At least you get a vacation!" came a voice from Cheeseball's pants pocket. "It's like every second of every day Cheeseball whips me out to look up some new Pokémon. I could really use a rest. But no, it's Drowzee this, and Dugtrio that. It never ends!"
When I read this it made me think of some other post I read where some guy said that new 5th gen icecream Pokemon should be afraid of Alakazam and their spoons.The effect was immediate; Kadabra immediately began stumbling its way to a wall, where there was a table. Kadabra approached a bowl of some sort of soup, and with its spoon, it started eating the soup.
Had to be quoted."Raticate! Destroy!"
WE WILL NEVER STOP CALLING YOU CHEESEBALL!!!!"We'll see about that," snarled Cheeseball. "And stop calling me Cheeseball! Raticate, Tackle attack!"
"Raticate, Hi Jump Kick!" called Jack.
"IT CAN'T LEARN THAT!" exclaimed Cheeseball in all caps.
Jack's Raticate makes Cheeseball's seem so... legit.
Missingno. Master, if you're trying to give Weezing a good reputation amongst your readers, you're succeeding.This, however, appeared to not make a difference; as Weezing appeared, it took one look at Cheeseball (two looks, if you count the second head), and immediately blasted a Sludge attack straight at him. Cheeseball ducked, but too late; he slowly got back up a moment later, hair dripping with sludge. Many partygoers started to laugh, and even Weezing started to chuckle.
Because he's from the internet and you're a machine."Not that! What he said about Cut!" exclaimed the Pokédex. "The captain of the S.S. Anne can teach Cut to Pokémon! You can get to Vermilion Gym!"
"Wait a second, I got it!" exclaimed Jack. "The captain of the S.S. Anne can teach Cut to Pokémon! I can get to Vermilion Gym!"
"Why do I put up with him?" muttered the Pokédex.
"STOP THE SHIP!" roared Jack, in all caps, bold, and size three font. But nothing happened.
"Maybe you should have sprung for size five," remarked the Pokédex."Yeah, should've gone for five."STOP THE SHIP!" roared Jack, in all caps, bold, and size five font. But nothing happened.
Of course the author has a soul! Wait, he made us wait three days for this chapter... He has an evil soul, which is still a soul!Although Jack was of the opinion that his author had no soul, the Pokédex knew better than to include such language in the narration.
Now since this fic doesn't use the four move limit, Jack's not really going to have the HMs-waste-a move-slot-problem. Or will he?
This chapter was great. Cheeseball battle of battleness is awesome (of awesomeness).
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My Loyal Feraligator
Posting to say I'm still alive. Sorry I haven't been able to read for past two months. ya know, school work =/
Let's see, I think I left off at Chapter 7...
Jack's a lady's man isn't he?"Because you're afraid of looking like an idiot in front of a hot Gym Leader?"
"No, because..." Jack paused and thought about it for a few seconds. "Actually, that about nails it," he muttered.
Can you imagine that O.o"Uungh!" grunted Jack. "These doors are stuck!"
"Um, Jack?"
"Quiet, you. Unless you can suddenly sprout arms and legs and help me push, anyway."
"But-"
"I SAID SHUT IT!"
This is fine the way it is but I thought I'd point this out. If you want to show someone is thinking you should do it in a way that makes it look different from the rest of the dialogue, just so the reader doesn't get confused. Most people italicize it since it's usually associated with thought.
That was a good move on Jack's part for polluting the pool, even if it'll be a problem for Misty later.
XD Poor narrator"Quick, Sunkern! Energy Ball!" called Jack. He figured that Energy Ball would work normally, now that they were no longer in the internet. He was, therefore, very surprised to see the Energy Ball spiral towards his Pokédex. Before Jack could react, the Energy Ball had been absorbed by the Pokédex.
"Energy Ball uploaded to the internet," said the Pokédex.
"Weeee.... ZING!" called Weezing, both heads calling out simultaneously, as the Poison Gas Pokémon crackled with electricity, then launched a sizzling lightning bolt at Floatzel. Despite the lengthy description used here, neither Misty nor Floatzel had any time at all to react.Breaking the 4th wall ftw"NO!" screamed the Pokédex. "Jack, you imbecile, don't you ever watch TV? The last thing you want to do is inflict headache-inducing soundwaves upon a Psyduck, let alone this particular Psyduck!"
I think Pidegot is a worse offender of that than Pidegotto...In a flash of light, a Flying-type Pokemon emerged from the Poké Ball thrown by Cheeseball. Jack thought it resembled a larger version of Pidgey, and one that really needed a haircut at that.
I thought Abra could battle while it was asleep. Oh wait maybe that was Jirachi... no wait, I just read two lines down XD"WHAT?!" roared Cheeseball. "Wake up, you stupid sleepaholic! We got a battle to win!"
Abra's eyes didn't open, but the snores stopped. It turned its head around and muttered, "Abra abra abra."
"What did it say?" Jack asked his Pokédex.
"I can't tell you without needing to up the rating of this fanfic," replied the Pokédex. "Let's just say Abra told Cheeseball to do something."
That figures."...bra?" it asked.
"Heh heh, it said 'bra'," chuckled Jack.
This part was really well done XDThis angered Jack. Immediately and without thinking, he grabbed a Poké Ball at random and threw it.
In a flash of light and a flurry of stars, Rayquaza materialized, shrieking loudly. Without waiting for orders, it fired off a Hyper Beam attack directly at Raticate. Raticate tried to avoid it, but it was still caught up in the resulting explosion. Raticate landed back in its trainer's arms, now unconscious.
"WHAT THE *bleep*?!" exclaimed Cheeseball. Jack looked at his Pokédex.
"Bleep? Seriously?"
"Hey, this fanfic isn't rated for strong language," replied the Pokédex. "I had to do something."
Threats always work when trying to hide something."Don't change the subject!" Cheeseball snapped. "You're hiding something from me, I know it!"
"Of course I'm not!" Jack lied. "What would I have to hide from you?"
"First off, you got a Weezing way too early. There are no Koffing in that area at all. And now you have a Shiny Rayquaza?! Impossible! And come to think of it, I've never seen you in Pallet Town at all prior to that day where we got our starters!"
"Oh, you must have just never met me before," said Jack.
"Pallet Town consists of two houses and Grandpa's lab," replied Cheeseball. "Unless you've been living with Red, there's no way you've ever lived in Pallet Town. Where are you really from?"
"Enough of the talking already! I want to finish this battle!" exclaimed Jack.
"Not until you tell me where you're really from," replied Cheeseball stubbornly.
"If you don't send out your last Pokémon, Rayquaza is going to rearrange your face!" roared Jack.
Dun-dun-DUNNNN!!Scowling, Cheeseball returned Squirtle to its Poké Ball. "So you may win this time, but mark my words, Jack. I will find out who or what you really are!"
"Dude, you are so overly-dramatic," said Jack as he recalled Ivysaur.
Looks like Miror B and the narrator never get a break anymore do they?"Yeah, Jack, I managed to fight off the pop-ups, but we got bigger problems now."
"What do you mean? What bigger problems?"
"Well, a random Energy Ball attack just flew out of nowhere and smashed a small hole in the prison wall. That triggered some sort of alarm. I seem to be in the position of fighting off hordes of Growlithe and Poochyena now. Oh, please tell me you have all eight badges!"
"No, but I just won the CascadeBadge in the previous chapter," said Jack. "I'll try and hurry it up."
"See that you do, over and out," replied Miror B., and the device went silent.
Missed capitalizing "we" in this part... and what the hell?! O_O that's awesome!
XD"I can help, too," said the Pokédex, as it fired off transparent red beams from its new robotic eyes. Instantly, the ice struck by these beams began to melt.
Jack stared at his Pokédex in amazement. "Where did you get heat vision?" he asked.
"Internet," replied the Pokédex.
Total Quote Count: 15
New Record!!
I'll read the other chapters once I get the chance. Great work Missingno. Master ^_^
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Meowth, dat's right!
You seem thrilled.
It's too tempting to not do that every so often.
And now, for some reason, I just imagined a group of Pokédexes lounging on beach chairs, b*tching about their trainers. Thank you.
I think I might've seen that post as well. Well, once I start implementing Generation V stuff, I just might work that into something.
Naturally.
Glad to hear it.
Cheeseball should've memorized moar of Akshun Reeplae's book. As Jack will learn later on, later chapters cover illicit movepools.
That's good, because it irks me that my favorite Pokemon doesn't get a good reputation anywhere near where I live. My brother, my cousins, several of my friends in college, they all hate Weezing.
This reminds me, someone asked whether Jack's Pokédex had internet access due to it knowing these memes. I'd have thought this would have been realized sooner, when it was able to upload Sunkern's Energy Ball to the internet, back in Jack's battle against Misty.
Oh, come on. It was worth the wait, wasn't it?
Nope. Though, that's not to say the subject will be avoided altogether...
Now you're gonna start saying "battle of battleness" all the time, aren't you?
Believe me, I don't blame you. School work's what's keeping me from updating this story as much as I'd like to. If I had my way, the chapter where Jack would arrive at Pokemon Tower would've been up by Halloween.
He likes to think so.
Apparently I can, as you've undoubtedly found out.
Ah, OK, I'll keep that in mind. You got a point there.
He does not catch a break, does he?
Please. The 4th wall's been shattered beyond repair ever since the first chapter of The Adventure of Adventureness, which introduced the narrator as a character and revealed Jack's plot to exact revenge on his author.
Oh, yes. And when Jack first encounters one, this will be brought up.
Yeah, it can fight while asleep too. However, it sleeps for a thousand years in a row, and is only awake for a week, as opposed to Abra's 18-hour snoozes. Besides, Cheeseball didn't know Abra could fight in its sleep. He may whip out his Pokédex for everything, but that doesn't mean he listens to anything beyond the name.
He's a 10-year-old, of course he's gonna have an immature sense of humor. Hell, I'm 20, and I still have an immature sense of humor!
Thanks! More 4th wall breakage ftw.
So Jack's noticed.
Nope.
Of awesomeness.
Come on, it had to be done, and you know it.
Thanks!
The next chapter will include Jack's third gym battle. Just a little something for you all to look forward to. Unfortunately I appear to be coming down with a cold, so I might not get it up all too quickly. I can confidently say it will probably be up within a week, but don't hold me to that.
Oh, and I just might possibly consider adding in Vermilion Gym's ultra-annoying trash can puzzle. An excellent opportunity for Jack to start making the Pokédex break out the bleeps, don't you think?
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yay good chapter! the sludge part was awsome(of awesomeness) and that comment about the Pokédex's b*ching about there trainers cracked me up.
Hoenn Champion
I'll just say that battling might not be your strong point, Missingno. Master, so I might avoid large battles like this chapter's in the future. There was some humor which made it worthwile, but some of the description wasn't handled the best and the battle seemed sort of clichéd. Also, sometimes a small attack might sometimes warrant a little shorter description than is used.
If I had more time I might give some more constructive criticism.
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It was fun though, other than the dying part.
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