So Muramasa has a real purpose for all of this after all.
Of course Orihime would heal him...oh, did you notice the arrancar reference.
That further proves to me that this is probably set after the fight with Aizen & Co., but was planed a while ago since it doesn't include Ichigo's new vizard mask and is there for flawed since they are playing it now...[/rant]
Poor Gonryumaru...but at least now we get to see Tenken go bankai and fight with Kenny.
Is it just me or did it sound like Yamamoto, Ukitake and Kyoraku used a different speed technique in this episode?
I have some new found respect for Hyorinmaru.
Freezing Ryujin Jakka's flames like that, if only for a short time, is pretty awesome! (I might not be as impressed if it was some other flame...like InferunoRyruu ;p)
Don't kill me MC, I'm just playing around.
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Please check out my 4th & 5th gen trade thread posts.
Zam...I'm not offended...my ZANPAKTOU IS!!
InferunoRyruu wants to beat the living crap of you and your Zan.
...He is ******....
Manga Chapter....
遂に自ら動きだした藍染…！！一方、東仙が明かす力の正体とは果たして…！？
At last Aizen himself makes his move...! On the other hand, is Tousen's really revealing his true power?
狛『東仙… まさか貴様…！』
Komamura: "Tousen...you can't be...!"
檜佐木びっくり 東仙左手を顔に～～～
Hisagi is surprised as Tousen places his left hand on his face...
狛『… 東仙…！！ そこまで堕ちたか！！東仙！！！！』
Komamura: "...Tousen...! Have you fallen that far? Tousen!!!"
檜『… …隊長…！！』
Hisagi: "...Captain!!"
白き絶望…！！
White despair...!!
BLEACH 384 Can't Fear Your Own Sword
東仙、空中に仁王立ち
Tousen is in the air with an imposing stance.
檜『ホロウ化… それはホロウ化ですか東仙隊長…！！』
Hisagi: "Hollowification...Is that hollowification, Captain Tousen...!!"
東『そうだ』
Tousen: "Correct."
檜『…どうして…』
Hisagi: "...Why?"
無言で東仙、檜佐木を切る
Without a word, Tousen cuts down Hisagi.
檜『え…』 ]
Hisagi: "Eh.."
狛『檜佐木！！』
Komamura: "Hisagi!!"
狛『天ケン！！！』東仙に切りかかる
Koma: "Tenken!!!" He swings at Tousen.
東仙、止める
Tousen stops it.
狛『何！！！』
Koma: "What!?"
東仙、狛村左脇に蹴り
Tousen kicks Koma on the left side.
狛（何だ…この…… この力は…）
Koma: (What the...this...this power...)
狛村落ちていく
Koma falls.
東『…おかしなものだな…
Tousen: "...It's strange, you know...
お前達が仲間とする あの半死神の少年も 同じホロウ化の能力を持っている筈だ
That half shinigami boy is your comrade and has the same type of hollowfication abilities.
私がその力を手にする事が それほど蔑まなければならない事か？』
Why do you have to despise it to that degree what I possess it?"
ボロボロ狛『彼は… 黒崎一護は望んでホロウ化した訳ではない…
Injured Koma: "Kurosaki Ichigo did not desire hollowfication...
だが貴公は違う… 貴公は死神として充分な実力を持ちながら自らその道を踏み外したのだ…！！
But you are different...As a shinigimi you possess enough true power of your own yet you strayed to this path...!!"
貴公のそれは 堕落だ 東仙…！！』
You're degrading yourself, Tousen...!!"
東『堕落だと？
Tousen: "Degrading?
死神からホロウに近づく事が何故堕落だ？ それは死神とホロウを正邪で分ける矮小な二元論から 出る言葉だ』
Why is a shinigami moving closer to a hollow degrading? That comes from a diminutive sense of dualism that divides shinigami and hollow into right and wrong."
狛『違う！ 仲間を裏切り友を裏切り部下を裏切ってまでも 過ぎた力を手にしようとする事が
堕落だと言っているのだ！！』
Koma: "That's not it! I'm saying that it's degrading to seem excessive power and betray your comrades, friends, and subordinates!!"
東『…狛村…』
Tousen: "...Komamura..."
東『！！』
Tousen: "!!"
東仙の首に、死風の鎖がまかれる
Tousen's neck gets wrapped by the chain of Kazeshini (Hisagi's shikai)
檜佐木、東仙を押し倒し首を押える
Hisagi pushes Tousen down and holds him down by the neck.
東『…踏み込みが浅かったか …私も甘いな』
Tousen: "...Was it a superficial hit? I'm too lenient."
檜『…いえ 俺が反射的に半歩かわしたんです
Hisago: "...No. I reflexively half parried it.
剣を抜いて立つ時は常に半歩かわせるように構える―…
When I'm standing with my sword is out I'm always prepared to be able to half parry...
東仙隊長 あなたの教えです』
You taught me that, Captain Tousen."
檜佐木の回想
Hisagi has a flashback.
東『…どうした 檜佐木
Tousen: "...What's the matter, Hisagi?"
こんな所に呼び出して… 私に話とは一体何だ？』
Why did you summon me to place like this...What on earth do you have to say to me?"
檜『…東仙隊長… 俺を… 席官の座から外して下さい…！』
Hisagi: "...Captain Tousen...Please remove me from my seat...!"
東『…何かと思えば… 昨日の演習のミスなら気にするな
最初は誰でもあんなものだ』
Tousen: "...If you're thinking of that, don't worry about your mistakes from yesterday's practice. At the beginning everyone's that way."
檜『違うんです！！ あの時俺が出遅れたのはミスでも不注意でもない…
Hisagi: "That's not it!! I was late not because of a mistake, or because of carelessness...
俺は… 怖かったんです…！
I was...afraid...!
俺は昔演習で現世に行って そこで右目に傷を負いました…
A long time ago in practice I went to the real world and received an injury to my right eye.
ダメなんです… それ以来… 刀を抜く度 敵に対う度
必ず気持が半歩さがってしまう…！
It's no use...Ever since...when I take out my sword, when I face the enemy, I'm only half hearted...!
東仙隊長 俺… 俺は戦いが怖い…！！』
Captain Tousen...I...I'm afraid of battle..!!"
檜『あの時 あなたはこう言った
”だから君は席官でいるべきなのだ” 』
Hisagi: "At that time, this is what you said: That's why you should have a seat."
回想
Flashback.
東『戦士にとって最も大切なものは力ではない
Tousen: "To a soldier the most important thing isn't strength.
戦いを怖れる心だ 戦いを怖れるからこそ 同じく戦いを怖れる者達の為に
It is a heart which fears battle. It's precisely because of your fear of battle, that
剣を握って戦える 自分の握る剣にすら怯えぬ者に剣を握る資格はない
you can brandish your sword for others who similarly fear battlel. One who isn't afraid of wielding his own sword isn't qualified to hold it.
檜佐木 お前が本当に心から戦いを怖れているのなら』
Hisagi, if you are truly afraid of battle from the bottom of your heart."
檜『お前は既に戦士として かけがえの無いものを手にしているのだ…！
Hisagi: "As one who is already a soldier, you have possess something that can't be replaced.
…俺は… 俺には解りません東仙隊長… あの言葉を言ったあなたが…
...I...I don't understand, Captain Tousen...How you could have said those words...
何故力の為に全てを捨てたんですか…！ 今のあなたは…
could throw it all away...! Look at you now...
一体何を怖れていると言うんですか！！』
What in the world are you afraid of?"
東仙、無言で檜佐木刺す。
Without a word, Tousen skewers Hisagi.
檜『…東…せん… 隊長……』
Hisagi:" ...Captain...Tou...sen..."
檜佐木 ビル上から落ちていく
Hisagi falls from the top of a building.
東『…怖れているあ 私の恐怖は百年前から お前達死神と同化して死ぬことだ』
Tousen: "...Afraid? For the last 100 years I've been afraid of assimilating with you shinigami and dying."
Well we finally get to see Tosen's Vizard mask.
I know I've seen that same shape in helmets before.
I can't remember where i saw it recently though.
Weird how Komamura's bankai has been at the end of the latest anime episode and manga chapter, about to fight someone. xD
I was hoping they would shoot back to Ichigo and Unohana for a bit at the end.
Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15
Spoiler:
Zam...I'm not offended...my ZANPAKTOU IS!!
InferunoRyruu wants to beat the living crap of you and your Zan.
...He is ******....
Manga Chapter....
遂に自ら動きだした藍染…！！一方、東仙が明かす力の正体とは果たして…！？
At last Aizen himself makes his move...! On the other hand, is Tousen's really revealing his true power?
狛『東仙… まさか貴様…！』
Komamura: "Tousen...you can't be...!"
檜佐木びっくり 東仙左手を顔に～～～
Hisagi is surprised as Tousen places his left hand on his face...
狛『… 東仙…！！ そこまで堕ちたか！！東仙！！！！』
Komamura: "...Tousen...! Have you fallen that far? Tousen!!!"
檜『… …隊長…！！』
Hisagi: "...Captain!!"
白き絶望…！！
White despair...!!
BLEACH 384 Can't Fear Your Own Sword
東仙、空中に仁王立ち
Tousen is in the air with an imposing stance.
檜『ホロウ化… それはホロウ化ですか東仙隊長…！！』
Hisagi: "Hollowification...Is that hollowification, Captain Tousen...!!"
東『そうだ』
Tousen: "Correct."
檜『…どうして…』
Hisagi: "...Why?"
無言で東仙、檜佐木を切る
Without a word, Tousen cuts down Hisagi.
檜『え…』 ]
Hisagi: "Eh.."
狛『檜佐木！！』
Komamura: "Hisagi!!"
狛『天ケン！！！』東仙に切りかかる
Koma: "Tenken!!!" He swings at Tousen.
東仙、止める
Tousen stops it.
狛『何！！！』
Koma: "What!?"
東仙、狛村左脇に蹴り
Tousen kicks Koma on the left side.
狛（何だ…この…… この力は…）
Koma: (What the...this...this power...)
狛村落ちていく
Koma falls.
東『…おかしなものだな…
Tousen: "...It's strange, you know...
お前達が仲間とする あの半死神の少年も 同じホロウ化の能力を持っている筈だ
That half shinigami boy is your comrade and has the same type of hollowfication abilities.
私がその力を手にする事が それほど蔑まなければならない事か？』
Why do you have to despise it to that degree what I possess it?"
ボロボロ狛『彼は… 黒崎一護は望んでホロウ化した訳ではない…
Injured Koma: "Kurosaki Ichigo did not desire hollowfication...
だが貴公は違う… 貴公は死神として充分な実力を持ちながら自らその道を踏み外したのだ…！！
But you are different...As a shinigimi you possess enough true power of your own yet you strayed to this path...!!"
貴公のそれは 堕落だ 東仙…！！』
You're degrading yourself, Tousen...!!"
東『堕落だと？
Tousen: "Degrading?
死神からホロウに近づく事が何故堕落だ？ それは死神とホロウを正邪で分ける矮小な二元論から 出る言葉だ』
Why is a shinigami moving closer to a hollow degrading? That comes from a diminutive sense of dualism that divides shinigami and hollow into right and wrong."
狛『違う！ 仲間を裏切り友を裏切り部下を裏切ってまでも 過ぎた力を手にしようとする事が
堕落だと言っているのだ！！』
Koma: "That's not it! I'm saying that it's degrading to seem excessive power and betray your comrades, friends, and subordinates!!"
東『…狛村…』
Tousen: "...Komamura..."
東『！！』
Tousen: "!!"
東仙の首に、死風の鎖がまかれる
Tousen's neck gets wrapped by the chain of Kazeshini (Hisagi's shikai)
檜佐木、東仙を押し倒し首を押える
Hisagi pushes Tousen down and holds him down by the neck.
東『…踏み込みが浅かったか …私も甘いな』
Tousen: "...Was it a superficial hit? I'm too lenient."
檜『…いえ 俺が反射的に半歩かわしたんです
Hisago: "...No. I reflexively half parried it.
剣を抜いて立つ時は常に半歩かわせるように構える―…
When I'm standing with my sword is out I'm always prepared to be able to half parry...
東仙隊長 あなたの教えです』
You taught me that, Captain Tousen."
檜佐木の回想
Hisagi has a flashback.
東『…どうした 檜佐木
Tousen: "...What's the matter, Hisagi?"
こんな所に呼び出して… 私に話とは一体何だ？』
Why did you summon me to place like this...What on earth do you have to say to me?"
檜『…東仙隊長… 俺を… 席官の座から外して下さい…！』
Hisagi: "...Captain Tousen...Please remove me from my seat...!"
東『…何かと思えば… 昨日の演習のミスなら気にするな
最初は誰でもあんなものだ』
Tousen: "...If you're thinking of that, don't worry about your mistakes from yesterday's practice. At the beginning everyone's that way."
檜『違うんです！！ あの時俺が出遅れたのはミスでも不注意でもない…
Hisagi: "That's not it!! I was late not because of a mistake, or because of carelessness...
俺は… 怖かったんです…！
I was...afraid...!
俺は昔演習で現世に行って そこで右目に傷を負いました…
A long time ago in practice I went to the real world and received an injury to my right eye.
ダメなんです… それ以来… 刀を抜く度 敵に対う度
必ず気持が半歩さがってしまう…！
It's no use...Ever since...when I take out my sword, when I face the enemy, I'm only half hearted...!
東仙隊長 俺… 俺は戦いが怖い…！！』
Captain Tousen...I...I'm afraid of battle..!!"
檜『あの時 あなたはこう言った
”だから君は席官でいるべきなのだ” 』
Hisagi: "At that time, this is what you said: That's why you should have a seat."
回想
Flashback.
東『戦士にとって最も大切なものは力ではない
Tousen: "To a soldier the most important thing isn't strength.
戦いを怖れる心だ 戦いを怖れるからこそ 同じく戦いを怖れる者達の為に
It is a heart which fears battle. It's precisely because of your fear of battle, that
剣を握って戦える 自分の握る剣にすら怯えぬ者に剣を握る資格はない
you can brandish your sword for others who similarly fear battlel. One who isn't afraid of wielding his own sword isn't qualified to hold it.
檜佐木 お前が本当に心から戦いを怖れているのなら』
Hisagi, if you are truly afraid of battle from the bottom of your heart."
檜『お前は既に戦士として かけがえの無いものを手にしているのだ…！
Hisagi: "As one who is already a soldier, you have possess something that can't be replaced.
…俺は… 俺には解りません東仙隊長… あの言葉を言ったあなたが…
...I...I don't understand, Captain Tousen...How you could have said those words...
何故力の為に全てを捨てたんですか…！ 今のあなたは…
could throw it all away...! Look at you now...
一体何を怖れていると言うんですか！！』
What in the world are you afraid of?"
東仙、無言で檜佐木刺す。
Without a word, Tousen skewers Hisagi.
檜『…東…せん… 隊長……』
Hisagi:" ...Captain...Tou...sen..."
檜佐木 ビル上から落ちていく
Hisagi falls from the top of a building.
東『…怖れているあ 私の恐怖は百年前から お前達死神と同化して死ぬことだ』
Tousen: "...Afraid? For the last 100 years I've been afraid of assimilating with you shinigami and dying."
I somewhat like Tousen's mask. The simplicity works well with his blindness. Though I wanted Aizen to have a pure white mask (it would be too close to Tousen's now), what with the God complex, something pure, like white, would work. Oh well.
Well... Err... Is there much else to say? I'd like to see how the fight will end, because now we're getting to the climax...
Oh, and I hate Tousen.
YOU JUST LOST THE GAME!
Click HERE to be rickrolled... c'mon, you know you want to.
Spoiler:- I HAVE DEFIED ALL MATHS AND LOGIC!:
A = B
A^2 = AB
A^2 - B^2 = AB - B^2
(A + B)(A - B) = B(A - B)
(A + B) = B
A + B = B
B + B = B
2B = B 2 = 1
Destruction covered the land, fallen Shinigami cover the ground while blood fell from the sky. Shinigami struggle against their enemy, being slaughter left and right, as each Shinigami fell in battle, the enemy attacked with even more ferocity.
Fall back, let the Captains handle them! yelled a young male Shinigami.
The Shinigami had long blonde hair, wearing a black hat and Captains robes. The back of his captains jacket read 9th division, and were covered in cuts, from the battle at hand.
The Shinigami quickly fell back and watched in awe as the 9th Captain wiped out the enemy. Several Shinigami fell to their knees from the Captains spiritual pressure, being almost crushed from his overwhelming power.
Captain Rotrum! Please stop-AHH!!! yelled another Shinigami, north from where the 9th Captain was. There stood the Captain of the 10th division, surrounded by comrades and enemies alike, full of Ice Daggers in them. He coldly charged against the enemy, killing anything in his way, including other Shinigami. His body covered in blood and hair white as snow, eyes broadcasting death to all that gazed into them.
These Semi-Sues are annoying! Their killing off Shinigami left and right, we cant let this keep up! yelled the Captain-General of the Shinigami. Towering over 6 feet and electrocuting all enemies in his range. He created a hollow golden cocoon around each fallen Shinigami he saw along the way, for the 4th Squad Captain to heal later
Chii! No! Not my sister! CHII!!! Screamed the 3rd division Captain in sheer despair with tears in her eyes. Her blonde hair covering her eyes as she cried over the death of her fellow Captain and sister, Chii. Her Wolf ears and Tail twitched violent as she swore to avenge her fallen sister.
Chii I I will HAVE MY REVENGE! BANKAI! Tsuki no Ryookami! She roared as she transformed into a more beast like form
--
The battle would fuel nightmares of survivors for years to come. The Shinigami took horrifically massive damage to their numbers; almost 99% of them were killed in battle.
The 7th and 13th squad wiped out completely, that coupled with the surviving Shinigami traumatized dramatically, they were slaughter. They managed to kill all the attacking semi sues but nearly were wiped out in the process, their spirits crushed and hope of victory shrinking faster each day, they had to take drastic measures in order to win.
A week after the savage massacre of their troops, the remaining Shinigami Captains held an emergency meeting
...yeah...pointers?
This isn't as nearly good as Golde's..intro...
'Arrancar like reiatsu', Oh dear, I don't like it already sounds to much like the Bounts... hope the filler will end soon.
Spoiler:- Spoiler manga:
Giant Yammy! <insert more comments>
Vizard Tosen, I knew it would happen, now just to wait for Gin to wear his giant smiley mask...
I'm wondering though... if Tosen's been vizard-ed with <that device Aizen has which I can't remember the name off> ... did he conquer his hollow or will it pop out like what happened with Ichigo?
Oh and Unohaha is pretty dumb to be honest, thinking Ichigo only has 'normal' captain level reiatsu because he's jonger than her.
'Arrancar like reiatsu', Oh dear, I don't like it already sounds to much like the Bounts... hope the filler will end soon.
Spoiler:- Spoiler manga:
Giant Yammy! <insert more comments>
Vizard Tosen, I knew it would happen, now just to wait for Gin to wear his giant smiley mask...
I'm wondering though... if Tosen's been vizard-ed with <that device Aizen has which I can't remember the name off> ... did he conquer his hollow or will it pop out like what happened with Ichigo?
Oh and Unohaha is pretty dumb to be honest, thinking Ichigo only has 'normal' captain level reiatsu because he's jonger than her.
That's all for now, ciao.
Hi Cell!
Spoiler:- anime respoce:
Are you talking about Orihime's comment on Muramasa?
Spoiler:- manga responce:
Gin's vizard mask having a giant grin on it would be funny. I want him to have something like the Wicked Jester logo(google it,a clothes brand).
Well most Vizards become Vizards because they have defeated their inner hollow. Ichigo's only comes out now when he's been badly beaten, because he doesn't have to power to subdue it anymore.
I don't think Unohana was dumb to assume Ichigo had normal captain class power, she didn't know his spiritual power was not replenished at first. But once she knew that she immediately figured that Ichigo full power was above captain class. He's only been at captain level power so far, so that's what she was used to.
Bye Cell! xD
Please check out my 4th & 5th gen trade thread posts.
Tousen's mask looks like a penis. I'm not even trying to be funny with that.
Maybe it has something to do with all his pretentious pseudo-philosophical bullcrap.
It matches his personality...at the very least....
Spoiler:- Response~:
I don't see it. And I EFFING love his mask. It's probably one of my favorites. And I love Tosen, he's uber.
Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15
The 2nd movie will be shown on saturday...
...I'm I the only one excited....?
Hell no. I'm psychedelically excited here. I've never seen it, and I really, really wanna
Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15
Spoiler:
Destruction covered the land, the corpses offallen Shinigami littered the ground and blood fell from the sky. Shinigami struggled against their enemy, being slaughtered left and right.As each Shinigami fell in battle, the enemy attacked with even more ferocity.
[Great opening, actually...really good. Try explaining briefly what the enemy is. I have no clue whether to picture hollows, arrancar, or something else. And also, make sure to keep your tenses right...
“Fall back! Let the Captains handle them!” yelled a young male Shinigami.
The Shinigami had long blonde hair, wearing a black hat and Captain’s robes. The back of his captain’s jacket read 9th division, and was covered in cuts (no comma) from the battle at hand.
The Shinigami quickly fell back and watched in awe as the 9th Captain wiped out the enemy. Several Shinigami fell to their knees from the Captain’s spiritual pressure, almost being (flip these) crushed from his overwhelming power.
[Not terrible at all. Except for a few grammatical errors, this one's pretty perfect]
“Captain Rotrum! Please stop-AHH!!!” yelled another Shinigami, north from where the 9th Captain was. There stood the Captain of the 10th division, surrounded by comrades and enemies alike, bothfull of ice daggers Not this (in them). He coldly charged against the enemy, killing anything in his way, including other Shinigami. His body covered in blood but hair as white as snow, eyes broadcasting death to all that gazed into them.
[Definitely captured his personality XD. The thing is, is someone who is reading this doesn't know about the ice daggers, or even rotrums zanpakutou yet, try briefly explaining that before you mention the ice daggers...also, when you said "and hair white as snow", change the "and" to "but". It helps the reader visual the contrast of him being covered in blood, which gives the image of brutality and cruelty, with the white hair, which would them to envision purity...and broadcasting...it works, IDK, it just seems awkward. But that's just my opinion
“These Semi-Sues are annoying! They're killing off Shinigami left and right !/, and we can’t let this keep up!” yelled the Captain-General of the Shinigami. Towering over 6 feet and electrocuting all enemies in his range. He created a hollow golden cocoon around each fallen Shinigami he saw along the way for the 4th Squad Captain to heal later…
[Someone sounds awesome.]
“Chii! No! Not my sister! CHII!!!” Screamed the 3rd division Captain in sheer despair with tears in her eyes. Her blonde hair covering her eyes as she cried over the death of her fellow Captain and sister, Chii. Her Wolf ears and Tail twitched violent as she swore to avenge her fallen sister.
[I actually really liked that scene, it definitely brought some emotions there.]
“Chii…I…I will…HAVE MY REVENGE! BANKAI! Tsuki no Ryookami!” She roared as she transformed into a more beast like form…
[Try having a little scene between Chii's death and NL going ape-****.
--
The battle would fuel nightmares of survivors for years to come. The Shinigami took horrifically massive damage to their numbers; almost 99% of them were killed in battle.
The 7th and 13th squad wiped out completely, that coupled with the surviving Shinigami traumatized dramatically, they were slaughter. They managed to kill all the attacking semi sues…but nearly were wiped out in the process, their spirits crushed and hope of victory shrinking faster each day, they had to take drastic measures in order to win.
A week after the savage massacre of their troops, the remaining Shinigami Captains held an emergency meeting…
[What the hell is a semi-sue? And also, the ending seemed abrupt, IDK...]
...yeah...pointers?
This isn't as nearly good as Golde's..intro...
It was good, really. Everything up there that's not a grammar correction is my personal opinion.
Originally Posted by Cell
Hey guys, long time not seen.
HEY. I was just wondering where you were.
Originally Posted by Cell
Spoiler:- Spoiler manga:
Vizard Tosen, I knew it would happen, now just to wait for Gin to wear his giant smiley mask...
I'm wondering though... if Tosen's been vizard-ed with <that device Aizen has which I can't remember the name off> ... did he conquer his hollow or will it pop out like what happened with Ichigo?
Spoiler:- Response to mask thingy:
First, it's the Hogyoku
Second, anyone ever play The Legend of Zelda, Majora's Mask? I always pictured Gin's mask as the Keaton mask, except with a line mouth smile, and a different color scheme, with swirls coming from the bottom up.
Last edited by Golde; 5th December 2009 at 5:39 AM.
Destruction covered the land; corpses of fallen Shinigami cover the ground while blood fell from the sky. Shinigami struggle against their enemy, being slaughter left and right, as each Shinigami fell in battle, the enemy attacked with even more ferocity.
The enemy were the evil semi-sues, the females all looked young and beautiful, eyes shining with brilliant hue. Their long and flowing hair danced as they graceful tore off the limbs of Shinigami, bodies curvy and covered in blood. The males were just as awe inspiring in their appearance. Their eyes just as striking as their female counter-parts, toned abs and the most unfit of them having 8 packs. Showing their overwhelming strength and might by throwing Shinigami around like they were rag dolls, killing them.
Fall back, let the Captains handle them! yelled a young male Shinigami.
The Shinigami had long blonde hair, wearing a black hat and Captains robes. The back of his captains jacket read 9th division, and were covered in cuts from the battle at hand.
The Shinigami quickly fell back and watched in awe as the 9th Captain wiped out the enemy. Several Shinigami fell to their knees from their Captains spiritual pressure, almost being crushed from his overwhelming power.
Captain Rotrum! Please stop-AHH!!! yelled another Shinigami, north from where the 9th Captain was. There stood the Captain of the 10th division, surrounded by comrades and enemies alike, full of Ice Daggers. Yuki Senkou, his ice type Zanpaktou, clasped in his cold hands, covered in the blood of Shinigami and semi-Sue alike. He coldly charged against the enemy, killing anything in his way, including other Shinigami. His body covered in blood but with hair white as snow, eyes broadcasting death to all that gazed into them.
These Semi-Sues are annoying! Their killing off Shinigami left and right, we cant let this keep up! yelled the Captain-General of the Shinigami. Towering over 6 feet and electrocuting all enemies in his range. He created a hollow golden cocoon around each fallen Shinigami he saw along the way, for the 4th Squad Captain to heal later
Chii! No! Not my sister! CHII!!! Screamed the 3rd division Captain in sheer despair with tears in her eyes. Her blonde hair covering her eyes as she cried over the death of her fellow Captain and sister, Chii. Her Wolf ears and Tail twitched violent as she swore to avenge her fallen sister.
Chii I I will HAVE MY REVENGE! BANKAI! Tsuki no Ryookami! She roared as she transformed into a more beast like form.
She howled as she began her transformation, fueled with rage and sadness. Her teeth became fangs, her hands became claws with sharp talons, she spurted wings and her eyes became glazed with a look of sheer animalistic ferocity. Her tail split into 9 separate tails, all whipping violent and wildly. Her aura gave off nothing but sheer killing intent and despair, shaking anyone around her to their core, be they an enemy or an ally.
Her movements were obscured by the malicious slaughter of the semi-sues, each of her tails, tearing, ripping, smashing, and stabbing anything around her with monstrous strength and force, causing upheavals in the ground. Her claws tearing through their bodies and drawing out nightmarish amounts of blood, masking her tears perfectly.
--
The battle would fuel nightmares of survivors for years to come. The Shinigami took horrifically massive damage to their numbers; almost 99% of them were killed in battle.
The 7th and 13th squad wiped out completely, that coupled with the surviving Shinigami traumatized dramatically, they were slaughter. They managed to kill all the attacking semi sues but nearly were wiped out in the process, their spirits crushed and hope of victory shrinking faster each day, they had to take drastic measures in order to win.
An hour after the savage massacre of their troops, the remaining Shinigami Captains held an emergency meeting. The Captain-General looked at his remaining captains and Lieutenants and felt horrible. His own squad completely wiped out from the battle, leaving him, Golde, as squad 1. Squad 2 had been completely wiped out along with the 7th and 13th squad. Squad 3 had only its Captain, NL, who was now coming to terms with her sister and Squads death. Arceus III, the Captain of Squad 4, had a look of absolute misery on his face. The 5th Squad only had its Captain left, Dre Flash, who had left for a mission before the assault. The 6th Squad had come out of the war with the most survivors, 3, Its Captain MC, its Lieutenant Muffin and its 3rd seat Eon, were all standing in the meeting room, waiting for it to begin. 8th Captain Senny and 9th Captain Zameric were standing firm, waiting for the meeting to begin. Rotrum, the Squad 10 Captain, was actually smiling and seemed happy. Captains of Squads 11 and 12 Luppi and ANT were barely able to stand, still recovering from the battle.
Okay, the meeting shall begin Golde said with deadpan look on his face.
---
Two figures stood on the battle field that was full of destruction, just an hour ago.
Both were in white cloaks and were covered by it completely.
Phase one complete Said the taller, more muscular figure, in a deep voice.
Soon, our aspirations will come to pass, and well both have our dream Harem! said the shorter and more feminine shaped one, in a high voice.
Mary you dont have to say it the male said.
Gary Im too excited to not say it Mary said.
We both worked too hard for this plan to backfire from stupidity! Gary yelled at Mary.
Please, were as close to perfection as possible, if anyone gets in our way we could easily kill them, not stop being paranoid and think about becoming 100% perfection! She yelled right back at him.
Youre an idiot, if it were that easy them we would have killed them all already. He said angrily.
Well as long as they dont get to them first, we got nothing to worry about she said kicking a corpse.
Destruction covered the land; corpses of fallen Shinigami cover the ground while blood fell from the sky. Shinigami struggle against their enemy, being slaughter left and right, as each Shinigami fell in battle, the enemy attacked with even more ferocity.
The enemy were the evil semi-sues, the females all looked young and beautiful, eyes shining with brilliant hue. Their long and flowing hair danced as they graceful tore off the limbs of Shinigami, bodies curvy and covered in blood. The males were just as awe inspiring in their appearance. Their eyes just as striking as their female counter-parts, toned abs and the most unfit of them having 8 packs. Showing their overwhelming strength and might by throwing Shinigami around like they were rag dolls, killing them.
“Fall back, let the Captains handle them!” yelled a young male Shinigami.
The Shinigami had long blonde hair, wearing a black hat and Captain’s robes. The back of his captain’s jacket read 9th division, and were covered in cuts from the battle at hand.
The Shinigami quickly fell back and watched in awe as the 9th Captain wiped out the enemy. Several Shinigami fell to their knees from their Captain’s spiritual pressure, almost being crushed from his overwhelming power.
“Captain Rotrum! Please stop-AHH!!!” yelled another Shinigami, north from where the 9th Captain was. There stood the Captain of the 10th division, surrounded by comrades and enemies alike, full of Ice Daggers. Yuki Senkou, his ice type Zanpaktou, clasped in his cold hands, covered in the blood of Shinigami and semi-Sue alike. He coldly charged against the enemy, killing anything in his way, including other Shinigami. His body covered in blood but with hair white as snow, eyes broadcasting death to all that gazed into them.
“These Semi-Sues are annoying! Their killing off Shinigami left and right, we can’t let this keep up!” yelled the Captain-General of the Shinigami. Towering over 6 feet and electrocuting all enemies in his range. He created a hollow golden cocoon around each fallen Shinigami he saw along the way, for the 4th Squad Captain to heal later…
“Chii! No! Not my sister! CHII!!!” Screamed the 3rd division Captain in sheer despair with tears in her eyes. Her blonde hair covering her eyes as she cried over the death of her fellow Captain and sister, Chii. Her Wolf ears and Tail twitched violent as she swore to avenge her fallen sister.
“Chii…I…I will…HAVE MY REVENGE! BANKAI! Tsuki no Ryookami!” She roared as she transformed into a more beast like form.
She howled as she began her transformation, fueled with rage and sadness. Her teeth became fangs, her hands became claws with sharp talons, she spurted wings and her eyes became glazed with a look of sheer animalistic ferocity. Her tail split into 9 separate tails, all whipping violent and wildly. Her aura gave off nothing but sheer killing intent and despair, shaking anyone around her to their core, be they an enemy or an ally.
Her movements were obscured by the malicious slaughter of the semi-sues, each of her tails, tearing, ripping, smashing, and stabbing anything around her with monstrous strength and force, causing upheavals in the ground. Her claws tearing through their bodies and drawing out nightmarish amounts of blood, masking her tears perfectly.
--
The battle would fuel nightmares of survivors for years to come. The Shinigami took horrifically massive damage to their numbers; almost 99% of them were killed in battle.
The 7th and 13th squad wiped out completely, that coupled with the surviving Shinigami traumatized dramatically, they were slaughter. They managed to kill all the attacking semi sues…but nearly were wiped out in the process, their spirits crushed and hope of victory shrinking faster each day, they had to take drastic measures in order to win.
An hour after the savage massacre of their troops, the remaining Shinigami Captains held an emergency meeting. The Captain-General looked at his remaining captains and Lieutenants and felt horrible. His own squad completely wiped out from the battle, leaving him, Golde, as squad 1. Squad 2 had been completely wiped out along with the 7th and 13th squad. Squad 3 had only its Captain, NL, who was now coming to terms with her sister and Squad’s death. Arceus III, the Captain of Squad 4, had a look of absolute misery on his face. The 5th Squad only had its Captain left, Dre Flash, who had left for a mission before the assault. The 6th Squad had come out of the war with the most survivors, 3, Its Captain MC, its Lieutenant Muffin and its 3rd seat Eon, were all standing in the meeting room, waiting for it to begin. 8th Captain Senny and 9th Captain Zameric were standing firm, waiting for the meeting to begin. Rotrum, the Squad 10 Captain, was actually smiling and seemed happy. Captains of Squads 11 and 12 Luppi and ANT were barely able to stand, still recovering from the battle.
“Okay, the meeting shall begin…” Golde said with deadpan look on his face.
---
Two figures stood on the battle field that was full of destruction, just an hour ago.
Both were in white cloaks and were covered by it completely.
“Phase one complete” Said the taller, more muscular figure, in a deep voice.
“Soon, our aspirations will come to pass, and we’ll both have our dream Harem!’ said the shorter and more feminine shaped one, in a high voice.
“Mary you don’t have to say it…” the male said.
“Gary…I’m too excited to not say it” Mary said.
“We both worked too hard for this plan to backfire from stupidity!” Gary yelled at Mary.
“Please, were as close to perfection as possible, if anyone gets in our way…we could easily kill them, not stop being paranoid and think about becoming 100% perfection!” She yelled right back at him.
“You’re an idiot, if it were that easy them we would have killed them all already.” He said angrily.
“Well as long as they don’t get to them first, we got nothing to worry about…” she said kicking a corpse.
This is the full version.
Favorite Bleach Extra?
That was very well written and the battle scenes were amazing for as short as they were individually! But I has no blonde hair, I'm a brunette.
Bleach Extra?
Also for those of you who watched the dub of the second movie for the first time on Sunday, what did you think?
Last edited by Zameric; 8th December 2009 at 6:05 AM.
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The chapter was very well done. Though I think the main problem has to do with your grammar. You tend to shift between tenses (past and present), like "Shinigami struggle against their enemy, being slaughter left and right," struggled and slaughtered.
Also, you change between single spacing and double spacing. I think because of the forum posting style stick with:
The Shinigami struggled against their enemy, being slaughter left and right. As each Shinigami fell in battle, the enemy attacked with even more ferocity.
The enemy were the evil semi-sues, the females all looked young and beautiful, eyes shining with brilliant hue.
Like that.
Plot wise, this is very interesting. I would really like to know about the Semi-Sues... And the way you wrote the last few lines, made it seem like there was a third party involved.
Btw, It's just "Ant", not "ANT". It isn't an acronym XP
YOU JUST LOST THE GAME!
Click HERE to be rickrolled... c'mon, you know you want to.
Spoiler:- I HAVE DEFIED ALL MATHS AND LOGIC!:
A = B
A^2 = AB
A^2 - B^2 = AB - B^2
(A + B)(A - B) = B(A - B)
(A + B) = B
A + B = B
B + B = B
2B = B 2 = 1
Passed a number of months,
I now return.
Y'know what, forget this. I don't feel like constructing a poem just to say Zachiru...
And just in case you didn't hear it the first time...
Zachiru.
I have come back from my long disappearance, and the first thing that catches my eye is MC's fanfic (latest chapter, actually).
Dude, you have stepped up so many levels. I must applaud your constantly improving abilities.
And yes, your grammar still needs work, but mostly only in the tense areas.
...do I need to talk about my zanpakutou again? Or did Golde save my previous zanpakutou post?
Check here for my Gijinka Project. (Alright, so I'm not good with advertising, is that such a big problem?)
Check here for my comic series, Fettuccine and Friends. (Well, at least I'm trying to advertise.)
Welcome to the new club Jin!
I'm pretty sure Golde didn't save your old post. But if the old club is still alive, you caqn grab it from there
Spoiler:- episode 249:
Well the was an alright episode...
Both Uryu and Chad didn't seem to be fighting at their strongest. But I guess their powers are a little limited in the real world compared to in Hueco Mundo.
I was worried that Kubo was going to leave Chad out of the rest of the battle for a minute there, but he redeemed himself.
I also almost thought Senbonzakura lost there for a minute. I'm glad he didn't because that would have been a dumb loss.
The preview was confusing and I have a translation for Kyoraku's sentence in the Shinigami Illustration Book since the dumb subber wrote it in Portuguese.
He was pretty much asking, "You think maybe they spend too much time together?"
Last edited by Zameric; 9th December 2009 at 3:59 PM.
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@Jin
Welcome back dude.
Thank you I'm still improving...(I hate word Perfect, its an annoying piece of -*&6%
I'll gladly inform you of any thing major that happened while you were away.
@Zam
The old club is dead.
But I think I have a copy of Jin's old Zanpaktou.
Speaking of..I need to change mine.... http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5568622/...ith_the_Fruits
Yet another Fic.
Ah, welcome (back) to the bleach club. I am unsure if we know each other from the previous club, however I am at least certain we know each other now.
Anyway, I am the Captain of the 12th Squad, I like Pokemon (...)/ILP/Aaroniero/Anternero/Ant/Whatever you want to nickname me.
Also, I've PM'd you your Zanpakutou from the old club.
I need to watch the Bleach episodes....
@MC, ah, the word "perfect". Myself, I associate it with Maths, what I regard the "perfect language". However, that is a topic of discussion for MSN...
YOU JUST LOST THE GAME!
Click HERE to be rickrolled... c'mon, you know you want to.
Spoiler:- I HAVE DEFIED ALL MATHS AND LOGIC!:
A = B
A^2 = AB
A^2 - B^2 = AB - B^2
(A + B)(A - B) = B(A - B)
(A + B) = B
A + B = B
B + B = B
2B = B 2 = 1
MC and Golde, I've updated my Zan with a new power, compliments of all the training I've been doing lately. I've also expanded on two of the older powers, so check it out if you get the chance.
Check here for my Gijinka Project. (Alright, so I'm not good with advertising, is that such a big problem?)
Check here for my comic series, Fettuccine and Friends. (Well, at least I'm trying to advertise.)
Welcome Kusari. Yeah, like Eon said, don't post one liners puh~lease.
God I haven't posted here in forever. >< Hi Jin!
Spoiler:- 385 spoilers:
According to them, Tosen's an arrancar and Shinji's zan is named Gyakubu (Which has been noted that it means "Counterstrike". I totally lmao at this because there's a video game named Counterstrike... yep. XD)
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