The glow of the full moon severed the starless sky like a spear and shone eerily through a crack in the termite ridden ceiling. As the moonlight floated down from the ceiling, it hit a flat surface and shed a creeping light across the rotten, wooden table. Within the secluded shack on the hill, there was a meeting of three beings, all shrouded in darkness.
I like the imagery here, but you kind of contrast with yourself, specifically with how the moonlight was able to “sever” the sky, which is more aggressive imagery, and then “floated down”, which is more passive.
“… are you sure?! Another?!” a deep, raspy voice called out it
surprise. “How is this possible Varas?!”
“It” should be “in”.
There also should be a comma before “Varas” since it's a direct address. I know it seems useless to do, but it helps avoid confusion when you trickier sentences. There's a difference between:
“You're going out with my cousin Fred” (as in you, the reader, is going out with my cousin who is named Fred).
“You're going out with my cousin, Fred” (as in you = Fred and he is going out with my cousin)
I had a dirtier version of this, but it was frowned upon. Either way, look out for sentences with direct addresses (there's too many for me to point out).
“Good. One is located in the place the……….
“One is located in the place the” makes no sense. Too many “the's” ... obviously. Lol. Or there's some sort of missing punctuation mark. You also don't need that many ellipses; three will suffice.
Elsewhere, it was a snowy day in the town of Pallet and the wind was whipping said snow all over the already covered ground. This was a snowstorm the like of which Pallet Town hadn’t seen in many, many years. The undersized Pokemon of the small town scurried hurriedly to their homes to avoid the air raid of the heavens. As the last of the Pidgey disappeared into a tree and the last of the Rattatta vanished into the underbrush, the storm picked up even more, absolutely coating the town in a blanket of snow.
I feel like you're getting a bit too wordy with this snow description. While you have nice wording and a nice setting description overall, I got it the first time that the snow is everywhere, and it's snowing hard, and it's a storm of snow, which means everything is blanketed in snow.
Inside a mid-sized townhouse, a boy on the eve of his sixteenth birthday sat by a warm fireplace and rubbed his hands together as he looked out the window. He saw nothing but white as the storm obscured his vision of the outside world. He threw his hands over his head in disbelief and stalked off into his bedroom down the hall.
“Awesome! Now I won’t be able to start my journey tomorrow… Whoop-doo-diddly-frickin-doo!” the teen yelled with a voice coated in sarcasm, before slamming the door shut and collapsing onto his twin-sized bed.
*pauses* So an almost sixteen year is *just* starting his journey? Hopefully later there's a good explanation for this. D:
He pounded the azure
blue pillows a few times and sat up to face the mirror that hung from the wall opposite his bed. He looked on aimlessly as his own unusually colored platinum eyes scanned up and down his fifteen year old body in boredom.
“Azure blue” is redundant. Azure is a shade of blue; there is no such thing as azure yellow. And that's a heavy descriptive color word to describe a pillow. Why not just use blue?
At about six feet tall, he was about normal height for his age, if not a bit taller, with a lean build that was draped by his oversized white and blue striped pajamas. He had jet black hair that was medium long and in an absolute mess all over the top of his head, jutting out in all different directions. The kid wasn’t the largest his age, but not the smallest either, he was rather average for one who was about to turn sixteen years of age.
Again, while it's decent physical description, I wouldn't advise on dumping it heavily in one paragraph. Take the time to spread out detail so it doesn't seem so obvious that you're describing a character. Small things like “sweeping a hand through (hair color) hair” and “he towered over his peers” (which indicates he's at least tall) really goes a long way AND seems relevant to your story at that moment.
“Psshh. Don’t worry about that! A little snow won’t slow my big strong trainer down!” Andrea ruffled his hair with the last bit and then turned towards the center of the kitchen once more. She went behind the wooden table in the center of the room and picked up a small, intricately wrapped box.
The mom is an interesting character with the way she kind of babies her son (despite his being almost sixteen). Kind of like a lot of mom's, though it seems kind of overexaggerrated here.
The source of the ash was the volcano that stood at the northern point of the islands,
it was spewing the remnants of flame forth at an alarming rate that usually only signified one thing[color=red,[/color] an eruption.
The first comma here is too weak to hold these two clauses together. Replace it with a period. The second comma would be better suited as a colon.
This beast was the legendary Pokemon known as Moltres, an enormous bird engulfed in flame. Its immense body was coated in yellow feathers that were red-hot to the touch and its beak and talons were a medium brown. The flame Pokemon’s wings, its tail, and the crest of its head spewed forth flames that were, due to its anger, white-hot. Moltres stared down at the girl, whose appearance was indeterminable due to the ash that coated her body, and let out an ear-piercing shriek.
See, here the info dumping is extremely apparent because as soon as you snag the reader in with some destruction and volcano and whee fire, you stop to unnecessarily
describe and detail what a moltres is. Why do I need to know, at this moment, what color the feathers a moltres has or the color its talons are (and what is medium brown)? You already introduce what the beast was with the girl's dialogue; why did you take the time to introduce it again? You have it cry out, you have it flap it wings ... Try incorporating the detail you have here in those moments instead of stopping the plot and action. By doing so, the flow of your story is smoother and doesn't seem choppy with odd “description” breaks.
After said shriek, Moltres’s flames began to die down and returned to the normal orange and red. Its eyes, now calm, stared down at the human kneeling before it.
You tend to use that “after said ____” a lot. It's fine, I suppose, but there are other ways to refer back to something, even if it's something simple “after it finished shrieking” or “after it shrieked” even.
Titus Polloa walked down the recently thawed path and breathed in his surroundings with excitement. He was wearing a brand new outfit, courtesy of his older sister who had sent the clothes from Hoenn, which seemed to give him a great air of confidence. [...] Slung over his shoulder, was a new, crimson traveling bag complete with a plethora of pockets.
I'm sure you know where this is headed. =P While this is nice detail, try spreading it out via action, like him fiddling with his belt buckle or frowning when dirt gets on his clean, new shoes instead of bluntly stating it. Show it. Don't just tell us.
The setup for the darker plot (the one involving the three figures and the moltres and the girl) was interesting. It made for a good hook. It sounds like a setup for a “chosen one” sort of story.
As for the rest of the plot, you ran into various overused cliches (something stopping the main protagonist from getting his pokemon, the main protagonist getting his pokemon the day of his birthday for some reason), which isn't necessarily bad but isn't exactly original either. Why did he have to get his pokemon on his birthday instead of some random, boring day?
I am extremely weary about the older trainer aspect because from what I've read so far (which is up to chapter two as I type this) you never explained why you had to make your trainer so old. Kanto's canon says that a trainer can get his pokemon as early as his tenth birthday (if not younger, as younger-looking trainers hold pokemon). If you want to have an older trainer, fine, but you better have a good explanation for it. I'm going to assume it has something to do with the academy but that still doesn't explain why an academy, who teaches a person to train pokemon, would hold a person back from adventuring/obtaining a pokemon for at least six years past the canonical age.