I just rread the 1st chapter for the Review Game, so here goes:
The opening was slightly dull. Describing the time and place is a good way to do it, but this didn't really hook me. The dialogue. however, was realistic and interesting from the very beginning. Michael especially sounded like a real 13-year-old. The character of Michael in general is intriguing; I'd like to see how he manages to grow up to be Professor Rowan. His mother, despite having much personality, is very much like a real mom, which is good. Now the way Chapter 1 ended was done fairly well; it was kind of a cliffhanger which is both good and bad. I will say that it made me want to read more, which is better than most fics on this site.
I don't use "uber" Pokemon (because they're banned), I don't calculate stat values (the simulator does it for me), I don't use cheating devices (because I hardly ever play the actual game), I don't breed my way to perfection (because I use a simulator), and I do care about natures. I battle the most efficient way, so I can use my strategic skills to the fullest. I don't look down on others because of the way they play Pokemon, which non-competitive people seem to actually do more often. If you use this philosophy, copy & paste this into your signature. (Started by DittoDude.)