Hello! This is my first fanfiction ever so please critique super hard, ok? I had a really hard time with the voice of the characters so give me information on that. Oh, and if you plan to continue reading the series (a chapter will come out approximately once per week) I suggest watching the eight minute clip about Mewtwo’s Origin. You can find it easily on Youtube.
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The sky was dark. But it wasn’t the scary kind of dark. There was no moon but the stars were speckled across the sky with an odd sort of ancient benevolence. Knowledge of the past mere mortals would never know. Not that it mattered to Mew. He just thought they were super pretty. So shiny…
Mew began to twirl about, whipping his long tail as he celebrated the cool evening. He preoccupied himself like this until he noticed something even brighter than the stars. They twinkled and blinked and made Mew happy. They were very, very far away, sitting on the ocean but looking like they were in the sky.
Mew floated lightly off towards the small island. A draft picked up and Mew squealed in delight and it carried him up higher. He began dancing in spinning in the air, and before long, arrived at the twinkling pretty place.
Mew soared across the island and decided to investigate one of those pretty lights. He dove down to a small house. It had a bunch of flowers to the side of it. Mew floated towards them then cautiously sniffed each one before leaping into them, sending petals everywhere and uprooting a few as well.
Then he was at the pretty light. He cautiously went up to it and peered through it.
There were things inside. He was pretty sure they were called persons. He had seen persons before. He generally thought of them as rather boring. They made a bunch of complicated sounds and wore pelts on their bodies and had weird, giant nests.
He flew up into the air again. He went up really, really high and looked around. He then realized the pretty lights all belonged to the giant nests.
Then he saw the HUMONGOUS nest.
It was huge!
He quickly flew off towards it.
Oooh. It was SO pretty!
The door was wide open so Mew just flew in. Everywhere there were tapestries and large, ornate chandeliers.
The floor was bright and spotless. It was so bright Mew could see his reflection. It actually looked still wet. It would be really fun to…
Mew dropped immediately to the floor and began sliding across the floor in a fit of squeals. He first started out on his bottom, then fell to his back and somehow ended up on his head. Then fell down the stairs.
Thump thump thump thump THUD.
Mew floated up a little disoriented and began to look around.
Wood paneling ran across the floor. There were many open rooms and large cabinets were everywhere. There was a slight feeling of neglect in this part of the mansion. Dust coated all surfaces and the many potted plants seemed to be slightly wilting. Mew decided not to touch anything ‘cause dust is really just dead skin.
Mew quickly grew bored wandering on this floor and was about to leave when he sensed someone.
Mew decided to try to sense all the persons in the house.
Mew then realized there was only one in this WHOLE ENTIRE place.
Mew wanted to find this person ‘cause he thought he might be lonely and needed a friend since he was in this big nest by himself.
He kept flying until he reached a really big wall.
How was he supposed to keep going?
That was when he noticed the gap in the corner of the two walls. It was a small gap. But Mew was pretty small too. He slipped through the gap to find a small makeshift laboratory. It was rather dark and there were glass pillars filled with orange liquid. Small bubbles floated inside of them. Wires were connected at the top of the pillars and connected them all together to make a big wire forest. Mew went farther into the lab to find the person.
He was thin and had a long bunch of hair arching over his face. He had a big nose. Mew giggled. It reminded him of Fearow’s beak. The man did not look up. He didn’t even hear Mew.
“Just a little more.” He murmured as he took a dropper and squeezed it over a small dish.
“There!” He quietly exclaimed. He looked at the little dish and smiled before placing it gently onto the table. He turned his swivel chair to face a very large and very complicated box adorned with many large and flashing buttons. As he pressed many of them in a very precise order Mew flew over to the table to look at the little liquid-filled dish. Mew was fascinated by the professor’s work. He was certain that this little dish was going to turn into something big.
Mew could sense it.
Itchy. So itchy!
Mew violently scratched behind his ear with his hind foot. The then saw a little clump of his hair float down and land lightly on top of the dishes’ surface.
Oh no. Oh no oh no oh no oh no! Had Mew messed everything up? He swirled about anxiously then stopped. He reasoned that surely a little bit of his fur couldn’t mess up anything. At least not all that badly…
The man then swiveled over to the table and gently picked up the dish. He then slowly stood up and slowly walked the clear dish into the large blinking box thingy. He placed into this super tiny slot. After that he backed up and looked at the big machine carefully. Sure, it was pretty, but Mew was growing imaptient. He wanted to see what would happen next...
He was about to pull a really big lever when he suddenly stopped, then bent down to look inside of the slot where he put in the dish, then finally sprang up and pulled the lever. The slot had a small plastic cover slide in front. There was a pause. Mew looked at the big box with his eyes wide, wondering what would happen next. Just as Mew was about to lose interest, the machine started blinking and making a ridiculous amount of noise.
Mew thought it was about to explode!
Then it all stopped.
Mew was disappointed. That’s it? A bunch of blinking lights and obnoxious noise?
Suddenly, the large glass pillar next to the obtrusive machine exploded with life. A bright, red light began to illuminate the entire room. Mew began to squeal with joy as he flipped around. The man could not hear it over his own cheers.
Then it just disappeared. The light zoomed back to the center of the tube. The man stared at the empty tube for a long time. He slowly took off his white trench coat and placed it on the back of the swivel chair.
“Why…” He said to no one in particular as he rubbed his hands through his hair. He purposely turned around and walked out of the room. His body was stiff and robotic as he slowly exited. He opened the door that lead to rest of the mansion and didn’t even bother to close it.
Mew turned around to face the tube. He had felt energy searing through his body when the light was shining. Now his body felt empty and cold from the absence of it.
He stared at the test tube for a long time. Then he thought he felt something...
Mew stopped mid- thought.
Something smelt really good. He immediately left the laboratory. The smell was up the stairs... He quickly flew up them and, after looking around the main hall, realized the smell was not here. He flew out the doors and found the origination of the smell.
It came from a pretty light on one of the nests. It was steaming hot. He heard a voice exclaim from inside, "Mama! You made a pie! Can we have it pleeease????"
A women's voice replied, "No, Timmy; it's too hot right now."
Mew didn't understand any of that, but he rationalized that the thing must be a... pie.
Why did they leave it there? They obviously must not want this pie. They just left it outside! Mew picked up with his psycic powers. He then flew off into the sky.
Not only a light show but pie too?
This was so worth leaving the jungle.