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    Intro chapter: It started in an alternate universe. The Distortion World, where a Pokemon lives in fear and anxiety from living alone for many years. Her name? Giratina. She lives in this alternate universe alone with just her teddy bear by her side. The darkness of this world has left young Giratina trembling in fear every night. She has no one. No one to tell her a story. No one to get her a glass of milk at night. Most importantly, no one to make her feel safe.

    She laid there in her bed, trying to keep herself awake so she doesn’t sleep, because everytime she does, she has nightmares about that fateful day. The day where she was banished from the real world years ago for her destructiveness and violence. She was a violent and destructive girl back in the day. She seemed to destroy anything she can get her hands on and when other Pokemon got tired of her, she’d pick fights with them and win them by force. Everytime the others made her angry or she didn't get her way, she would fight as well. That behavior the young Pokemon harbored, was the final straw for the legendary Pokemon, Arceus; who banished Giratina from the real world and sealed her in the Distortion World.

    Now, Giratina fights to prove that she is worthy enough to go back into the real world. She wants to prove to Arceus that she is indeed a good Pokemon and is responsible. However it is difficult for her to prove she can take such a big step because of the fact that she is very territorial about her things and her home. Everytime someone would take something from her, she'd fight. Eveytime someone would mess with her home, she'd fight to protect it. Despite that, she hopes that he will give her forgiveness and take her from this world. A world where a young Pokemon has to defend what is hers… alone. All Giratina has now, is a teddy bear that was made for her when she was in the real world. That was all she had to remind her of the other side.

    As Giratina laid in her bed, clutching her teddy bear; she heard a sound. A strange sound indeed. She hid under her covers as the warping sound got louder and louder. The sound was so loud, it made Giratina’s caterpillar like body tremble with fear. She held on to her bear tighter and she talked quietly to herself.

    “You don’t think it’s the mud people do you Bear Bear?” Giratina whispered with fear.

    It stopped. Everything went silent. However, Giratina was still shaking with fear as she tried to pretend she was asleep. She can feel someone about to come up to her. Although she was never kidnapped, she still always felt that one day, she was. Maybe, it might happen. All she knows is that there is someone there.

    “Giratina… wake up!” a familiar voice called out.

    Giratina got up from under the covers, only to see a stone right in front of her. When she looked up… she could have sworn she saw Arceus. Her vision was a little blurry, but she was sure she saw him.

    “Is that… Arceus?” She asked herself out loud.

    The stone in front of her suddenly shined a bright light. Obstructing her view of the figure in front of her. Before she can say anything else…

    “Sayonara Giratina…” the voice said as the room lit up in a white light.

    Giratina closed her eyes tightly as she felt a strong gust of wind blowing on her. She clutched tightly to her bear as she braced herself. Suddenly, it all stopped. The wind stopped. Even with eyes closed, she can tell that the light wasn’t as bright anymore. When she opened her eyes, she looked around, shocked and surprised.

    The sky above her was clear, blue and sunny and the grass was a dark green and was adorned with many flowers. The sound of the lake… the waves crashing against each other. This can all mean one thing… Giratina was in the real world.
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    Aww, there need to be more fics like these, that depict Giratina as a cute, misunderstood creature. I love stuff like this :3
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    “Ho—how?” Giratina thought to herself as she looked all around her.

    Could it be that she was teleported to the real world by accident? Or… was it really Arceus that sent her here for her good behavior? Nonetheless, Giratina takes advantage of this opportunity. To finally meet other Pokemon and be their friend.

    “Yay! I finally get to have friends” She said to herself as she hurriedly took to the skies in a loop.

    The skies were mostly clear and sunny with barely any clouds. This excited Giratina as she did many loop-de-loops while flying and at the same time… laughing. But soon, that thought was abruptly interrupted by the thought of that day. The day that she was banished from this world and was sent to the Distortion World. The more she thought about Arceus banishing her, the more afraid and upset she became. Eventually, she saw a forest down below and decided to fly towards it.

    Standing by the bark of a tree, Giratina sat there and cried. How she missed the days where she was around people and had friends. All those years or being isolated and never thought that she would be back to a place where she was kicked out of in the first place. As she was crying, she heard and felt someone coming her way. So hesitating, Giratina hid in the thick bushes, waiting to see who she was going to meet from her view. Evidentially, Giratina’s intuition was correct when she saw a blue 3-headed dragon coming her way.

    “I thought I heard something…” the female dragon said as she sniffed around with a gleam in her eyes. “Hydreigon, you’re imagining things… uggh” she said as she flew off.

    As Hydreigon left, Giratina came out of the bushes surprised and relived.

    “Wow! That girl was cool! I should follow her and we could be friends!” Giratina said with glee as she took off as fast as her wings will take her.

    Using her memory of what she looked like, Giratina looked all around for the 3-headed dragon. Eventually spotting her on a cattle ranch, she dives down slowly and hides in a nearby haystack.

    “I don’t want her to notice me now, but when she gets closer, then I’ll introduce myself” Giratina whispered loudly to her bear.

    As Hydreigon was attempting to eat one of the cattle she has her hands on, she could almost swore she heard whispering. She turned back to see if anyone as behind her but there was no one there. However, as she turned back to try and eat the cattle, she heard rustling behind her.

    “Alrighty Farmer Ben… you don’t have to play dirty tricks because I can see right through them!” Hydreigon said with a smirk as she looked behind her.

    “Maybe… I should just show myself” Giratina whispered to her teddy bear as she came right out of the haystack.

    As of now, both Hydreigon and Giratina were face to face with each other. Both surprised seeing as they have never seen anything like each other before. In Giratina’s mind, it was like a “someone say something” moment.

    “Hi! My name is Giratina. It’s nice to meet you. Tell me who you are and we can be friends!” Giratina introduced herself with excitement.
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    In the next chapter, Hydreigon has a seizure of terror and pledges her allegiance to Giratina, assuming she is seen as a Satanic figure, and brings her a blood sacrifice.

    Good fic, so far. It's quite funny how Giratina, one of the most Lovecraftian legendaries of alk time, can be made so cuddly and innocent.

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    Mud people, you made Giratina sound really innocent. I like your idea.
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    Awwwwww! this is soooooooo cute!!!!! I LOVE how you made Giratina cute and lovable
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    Ah thanks for the comments. Yayy for cute Giratina!
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    I'm actually liking this fic!

    Maybe the Chapter's could be tad bit longer, but I'mnot going to complain about that in the slightest because your fic is easy to understand and easy to read.

    I also appreciate the lack of spelling errors, makes it more pleasing to the eyes ya'kno?

    Lol, loving the "cute&lovable" feel your attempting with Giratina, but my only problem was that I thought you were making her more human-like, because while reading I kept thinking,

    "Well, isn't Giratina like, ... a Giant or something?"

    But all-in-all a clean and easy read so far. Please continue this because I llok forward to seeing how the 3-headed Pokemon is going to react to 'Tina's sudden intrusion.

    “Yay! I finally get to have friends” She said to herself as she hurriedly took to the skies in a loop.
    ^^ SOMEONES spent a little too much time in the Distortion world, huh?

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    Giratina is a Pokemon but given a human personality. I didnt make her human.
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    This makes me want to use my Giratina more often! I love it! She seems so innocent... Do you have a PM list? If not, could you make one and add me to it?
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    What's a PM list?

    And yeah Giratina is the only legendary I like and will ever use. Well maybe cept Reshiram because he's got charm to him but Giratina is one that fights like she's everyone one else. In short, she doesn't give off the "IMMA LEGENDARY POKEMON, I BETTURE THAN YEW!11!! RAWARR!"

    I'm shocked at how people like this story XD
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    A PM List is where a fanfic writer or someone on a forum makes a list of people that they Private Message, so that they're aware of new things like say for instance: you making a new chapter.

    Then you'd go and PM everyone on your list and tell them.

    I have a VM list of people that I send Visitor posts to.

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    Ahh I see. LOL

    Well I'm currently writing the third chapter naoo lol
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    Part 3:

    “H-hey! Don’t come close to me!” Hydreigon said as Giratina tried to get closer to her.

    “Yay! You finally spoke! Can you tell me your name?” Giratina said happily.

    Hydreigon looked at the young dragon with a strange look. She really didn’t want to talk to her… she wanted to leave… but something inside of her wouldn’t move. She thought to herself: “Who is this girl? And why does she want to be my friend?”

    “I can do a lot of things, kiddo” Hydreigon bluntly answered.

    “But… can you PLEASEEEEEEE tell me your name?” Giratina asked hesitantly.

    The 3 headed dragon then took a deep sigh as she had to give this young girl the information that she has been asking for. She really didn’t want to, but felt pressured and obligated to do so.

    “Hydreigon…” she scoffed in a quiet tone as she rolled her eyes.

    Giratina got what she wanted from Hydreigon, however… due to her saying it in a quiet tune, it was hard to make out what she was saying.

    “Huh? I can’t hear you. Can you say that again?” Giratina asked.

    At this point, Hydreigon’s patience dropped as tried to keep her composure. However, she can feel her blood boiling and her muscles tensing. She never wanted to answer Giratina in the first place… but because she’s so young and immature as compared to herself, she felt that she had to. Nonetheless, she got so angry, that she answered her again, but using her Hyper Voice.

    “HYYYY-DREEEHH-GOOONNN!!!!!!!!!” She yelled out in her loudest Hyper Voice she can project.

    Giratina heard her, but it never done any damage to her sense normal damage dealing moves didn’t affect her. Still, she looked at the frustrated Hydreigon with concern.

    “Hydreigon… I’ll remember that” Giratina said as she tried to make light out of the situation.

    “Yeah you better. Look, I don’t have time for little kids. So say what you want to say to me so I can leave” Hydreigon snapped.

    “Well… you see… I am from a different world than here. So I don’t know what to expect here since… well… it’s been a long time sense I’ve been here. All I want is a friend. I want someone to talk to when I’m sad. In my world, I have no one but myself. Everyone I knew, I was separated from them. I miss my mamma. She has been banished before I have. So I never got to see her again” Giratina explained. While doing so, she let out a tear. “When I saw you, I thought you were cool. So I wanted to be your friend”

    “Well, I’m sorry that you don’t have anyone, but going up to people the way you did is not a way to make friends. I don’t know you… so how can I be your friend? You have to know a person first before saying you want to be their friend. Judging by the way you came up to me, you don’t know much about me” Hydreigon explained.

    “Well, why don’t you get to know each other now while you have the chance?” a familiar voice said from up top of a cliff.

    Surprised and spooked, Hydreigon and Giratina looked all around them to see if anyone was there. But no one was around. Not even cattle.

    “So I see a fresh new face in our group. Pleased to make your acquaintance” the voice said again.

    The girls looked around again, but no one responded. Shortly, Hydreigon looked to the top of a cliff and there stood Gothitelle, the group leader. After being spotted by Hydreigon, Gothitelle used her Rock Slide maneuver to slide her way down the cliff and on to the bottom to great the new young dragon.

    “You said you were new here right?” Gothitelle asked Giratina.

    “Wh-why yes I am new. My name is Giratina and I want to have new friends” Giratina replied hesitantly.

    “Nice to meet you, Giratina. My name is Gothitelle and I lead the group. I’m the girl to ask if you ever need help. Hey, do you want to join my group?” Gothitelle explained.

    “A group?? Neato!” Giratina squealed.

    “Well Giratina, in order to join my group, you have to answer a science question” Gothitelle said as she began to ask her question. “What item are you holding?”

    “Ahhh.. a gres.. gresi.. no gracious orb..” Giratina stuttered as she tried to pronounce the name of the item she was holding.

    “All right. It’s called a Griseous Orb. You were right on track so you are in. You are in luck because you get to meet many different Pokemon. Hey, you even gained a friend now. Welcome to the group, my friend” Gothitelle said as she pats Giratina on her back. “Now… where’s Hydreigon? I was supposed teach her this TM I made but she disappeared”

    “Hydreigon was here…” Giratina looked back and she realized Hydreigon wasn’t there. Her only guess is that she left. When she realized this, she let out a tear.

    “Don’t cry Giratina… Hydreigon isn’t very friendly anyway” Gothitelle said sympathetically.

    Just then, the girls heard someone screaming at the top of their lungs. It sounded like It came from up high.

    “HAXORUSSSSSSS!!!” the voice screamed out from above. To the girl’s surprise, it was Hydreigon. Trapped in Ghetisis’ claw machine.
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    Ghestis? Team plasma? Claw machine?

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    I don't even care. Forget what is in that above obsess post!. This story is captivating... Sweet... Nice... Well-paced... And so far has distinct personalities. It's original, the only thing I don't like is it seems almost too sweet and girly. But, only just over a indistinct line. It's cute, and nice... Wow. I love it. Eh heh... Now I feel bad. About the claw... Ima cross it out! Wait... I don't know how too do it... Spolier!
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    Ghetisis in the story isn't with Team Plasma, just by himself lol

    As for it being girly, Giratina is a very girly character. So is Hydreigon.
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    I thought that the group thing she joined would use her power for evil, but if Ghetisis is after them, I guess they aren't bad. Good work, if you put Charizard in this story I will love you.
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    Nah, Giratina is a good character.

    There are a couple of bad Pokemon in the series of mine. Most of them working for Ghetsis (Magikarp, Sneasel, Koffing) then you got Milotic who is very cunning but is evil in her own right. She'll pretty much work for Ghetsis is she felt like it.

    Charzard I can sqeeze in... he'd be an intern wanting to work for Gothitelle's workshop... so they will see him alot
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    Hm... why would Hydreigon cry out "Haxorus!"?
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    Hydreigon has been captured by Ghetsis. And everytime she does so, she calls out for Haxorus to dash to her rescue. He always comes to her rescue.

    Oh and Haxorus is Hydreigon's boyfriend
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    OOOHHHHHH scandilous! Hahahaha.
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    currently finishing up the 4th chapter lol

    Gothitelle is pretty awesome in this.
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    Part 4:

    “I’m afraid our little game ends now” Ghetsis said with a smirk.

    “HAXORUS!!! HELPPPPPPPPP!” Hydreigon yelled out again. “LET ME GO DOO-DOO BRAIN! LET ME GO!”

    “Doo-doo brain?! GRRR That’s it. I had it with your stupid insults! You will pay for this!” Ghetsis said with rage as he was about to depart the scene.

    But as the arch foe was about to leave for his base, he heard someone running up the hill… two to be exact. Could it be? It can’t be… it is! It was none other than Haxorus himself accompanied by Garchomp.

    “Who are those guys? And who’s the guy taking Hydreigon?” Giratina asked as she was puzzled.

    “The man taking Hydreigon is Ghetsis. He is our arch enemy. You need to be on the lookout for him because he can kidnap you as well. Those two dragons over there. The brown one is Haxorus, he is a very friendly guy. The blue one is Garchomp, she’s hard to deal with but she means well” Gothitelle explained.

    “Hey Ghetsis! I see you still are a one trick pony are you?” Haxorus said with a smirk.

    “Heh heh he! Well this plan of mine is so brilliant not even a smart guy like you can break it apart. MWAHAHAHA!” Ghetsis gloated.

    “Well then Ghetsis, let’s see if your plan will fail like always…” Haxorus said as he walked slowly towards Ghetsis’ machine. “Don’t worry pretty girl, I’ll save you!”

    “Haxorus…” Hydreigon said softly as she was hopeful that he was going to save her from Ghetsis.

    As Haxorus moved close to his machine, Ghetsis pressed a red button on his dashboard, which in return, tightened the claw that trapped Hydreigon. It made her scream as the claw around her squeezed her tummy area to the point that it hurt her. This scared Haxorus as he froze.

    “Hydreigon!” he yelled out in fear.

    “Take one more step and I will push the button again” Ghetsis said with a sly grin.

    “You wouldn’t DARE!” Garchomp yelled.

    “Oooh, I would if her *boyfriend* took another step toward me! HAHAHAHAHA! Well, what I was sating before I was so RUDELY interrupted, I believe our little game ends now...” Ghetsis said as he flew off on his claw machine.

    “If my hypothesis is correct, Ghetsis is going to his air base” Gothitelle said.

    “You mean the new one he built 3 days ago?” Haxorus asked.

    “Yes, that one. I happen to know the exact points of his location, so I will have to take you there” she explained as she got out her walkie-talkie. “Gothitelle to Bisharp. Over”

    “Over” Bisharp responded on the other line.

    “I need a chopper sent to 35 degrees longitude, 120 degrees latitude. Over” Gothitelle requested as she waited for a response from her friend.

    “Can Charizard come with me?” Bisharp asked.

    “Sure, he’s my intern… why not?” Gothitelle answered. “Alrighty guys, we are going to have to wait for Bisharp to bring the chopper over”

    “I’m on my way” Bisharp quickly said.

    “Um… what’s a chopper?” Giratina asked.

    “A chopper is another word for helicopter. If you want to know what a helicopter is as well, it’s a flying device that takes you place to place in the air” Gothitelle explained.

    Moments later, the gang sees a big white chopper coming towards them. All moving out of the way as the chopper landed on the sandy floor.

    “Wow, your workshop must be close by or Bisharp is quick” Haxorus commented.

    “Both. My shop is very close to here… and Bisharp is a young lady that likes to do things fast” Gothitelle said.

    “Perfect. I want to see my Hydreigon fast” Haxorus said in a hesitant tone.

    “HEYYY GUYS!” a voice said from behind.

    Everyone turned around to see Bisharp in front of the chopper. “Chopper’s ready” she said.

    “I FINALLY GET TO RIDE A HELICOPTER!!!!!” Charizrd said happily.

    “I’m glad you like it. If you want… when you are ready I can teach you how to drive it. For now, let’s all get on board and go to Ghetsis’ base” Gothitelle instructed as everyone got on the chopper.

    Once everyone got on, the chopper prepared to take off. Giratina sat by the window and looked below her. This felt awesome to her because she saw the region from her view. It was very nice from a bird’s-eye view. What makes it even more exciting is that with her group, she will get the chance to explore different places and meet new friends.

    “This is so awesome!” Giratina said to her teddy bear as she leaned against the glass.

    “Hey! Is that Ghetsis’ air base?!” Garchomp asked.

    “Yes it is! And Giratina, please don’t lean on the glass…” Gothitelle said as she headed toward the base.

    “Sorry” Giratina apologized as she sat straight in her seat.

    “Hey, Gothitelle can I open the sliding glass door?” Haxorus asked as they went over the air base.

    “No because it’s dangerous to do so from this altitude” Gothitelle answered.

    However, Haxorus couldn’t wait for them to land. All he wanted was to get to the base and rescue Hydreigon. And if that meant taking a risk… it was all he was willing to do. That said, he unbuckled himself, opened the sliding glass door and stood on the ledge.

    “Haxorus! What are you doing?!” Gothitelle yelled out as she put the chopper on autopilot and unbuckled herself.

    In a split second, Haxorus jumped off the ledge, hoping to land on Ghetsis’ base. The others rush to the ledge and were all puzzled. However shortly after Haxorus’ jump, Garchomp jumped off the chopper and fell after him, hoping to catch up to him seeing as she can fly.

    “Those are guys officially crazy” Bisharp said. “They are going to get themselves killed”

    “Ehh, you know what… they can take care of themselves. It’s…” as Gothitelle was about to finish her sentence, she heard the window on the other side of the chopper open and something going out of it. When she turned around… she saw that Giratina was gone.
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    Okay. Like the whole story and what-not. I'm very curious to see what Gothitelle has in store for Giratina, although I'm still slightly curious that no one's noticed how utterly huge she is?

    There were a few punctuation errors here and there. Like the lack of periods at the end of someone speaking.

    Giratina heard her, but it never done any damage to her sense normal damage dealing moves didn’t affect her. Still, she looked at the frustrated Hydreigon with concern.
    I...I'm not too sure, but did you mean "it never did any damage"...?

    Giratina heard her, but it never done any damage to her since normal damage dealing moves didn’t affect her. Still, she looked at the frustrated Hydreigon with concern.
    Also, "sense" should be since. You did that twice in this part if I remember correctly.

    “Hydreigon… I’ll remember that.” Giratina said as she tried to make light out of the situation.
    Here's one of the punctuation parts I spoke of earlier. There should be a period after that, to show that Giratina stopped speaking.

    “Well… you see… I am from a different world than here. So I don’t know what to expect here since… well… it’s been a long time sense I’ve been here. All I want is a friend. I want someone to talk to when I’m sad. In my world, I have no one but myself. Everyone I knew, I was separated from them. I miss my mamma. She has been banished before I have. So I never got to see her again” Giratina explained. While doing so, she let out a tear. “When I saw you, I thought you were cool. So I wanted to be your friend”

    “Well, I’m sorry that you don’t have anyone, but going up to people the way you did is not a way to make friends. I don’t know you… so how can I be your friend? You have to know a person first before saying you want to be their friend. Judging by the way you came up to me, you don’t know much about me” Hydreigon explained.
    Very run-onish here. Maybe try spacing out big lengths of speech here; its more pleasing on the eyes.

    You could also try a semi-colon ";" after "She has been banished before I have';' " That way you could indent the speech more and keep it spaced out.

    “All right. It’s called a Griseous Orb. You were right on track so you are in. You are in luck because you get to meet many different Pokemon. Hey, you even gained a friend now. Welcome to the group, my friend” Gothitelle said as she pats Giratina on her back. “Now… where’s Hydreigon? I was supposed teach her this TM I made but she disappeared”
    I'm still stuck on how Giratina's small enough to be patted on the back and can hide behind bales of hay and such. If that's what your going for, it'd be easier (maybe not for everyone but for me), if you'd literate that more and try and tell if she's 'bigger than 3 stories' or 'about Gothitelle's size'.

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    That's it for corrections, but I did see... SOMEWHERE in this Chapter, where you misspelled "Greet". You accidentally put "great".

    Good story so far because it's making me come back to see what's Giratina's next random move towards getting a new friend. I guess that'll have to wait though because Haxorus is in a little bit of trouble themself...

    Credit to
    SWORN METALHEAD
    for the sig!

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    I dont know how small or big Giratina is. I made her kid like so my guessing is that she'd be a bit smaller than the other dragons.

    Gothitelle is awesome and she's got pokemon that look up to her as their mentor and role model. Bisharp and Conkeldurr being two characters. She'll probably teach Giratina a few things about fighting and self defense in the next story.

    In short, Gothitelle belives that she can do anything if she puts her mind to it. She can drive and fly planes and fix em. also teach Pokemon how to fight and also acts as a counselor and move tutor.

    BTW so far who's your favorite character in the story?
    Last edited by はるひ; 10th June 2011 at 2:15 AM.
    岩根雅明=♡

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