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    Welcome to my first attempt at a drabble. For those of you unaware of the concept, a drabble is a short story that is, by strictest definition, exactly 100 words. And before anyone says anything, I checked the rules, and yes, drabbles ARE allowed. It's preferred that they are all in one thread, but I don't see myself writing any further drabbles anyway.

    So here it is, enjoy.
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    It happened again.

    A trainer approached me. Maybe, just maybe, this one would capture me.

    No such luck.

    There was the usual battle. I lost. Again.

    All he cared about is what happened after the battle. I copied his items. I don't try to. I don't want to. It just happens.

    Nobody wants to catch me. Nobody wants to train me.

    They're all afraid of me.

    They don't even call me a Pokémon. They call me a glitch. A mistake. Hurtful things like that.

    I am not a glitch. I am not a mistake.

    I am alive.

    I am Missingno.
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    Short, sweet and to the point. That restriction sounds pretty hard, but you still managed to make a small, yet meaningful, story out of it.

    There's not much to review here, but I liked how you chose to use Missingno's perspective on its existance.
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    I am a Pokémon.
    Make this 'I am alive' to remove the repetition of 'Pokemon', and slip in an additional word somewhere, and I think this could pack a harder punch to the gut.

    Herm. Don't get me wrong, I love little 100 word drabbles. I wish there was more subtlety slipped into the 100 words though. </3

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    Wow. that was good, short and strait to the point (although that's what it's suposed to be) it makes you feel kinda sad for Missingno.
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    Pretty good. I like it. 100 words, Missigno and its point of view. Cool.
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    That was a really sweet story for Missingno. The length of it actually seemed perfect. Good job. ^^

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    Awwwwww, man! I had a really cool idea for an entire depressing story about Missingno. and how he wasn't "real" though this actually handled it better than my draft version. Short but sweet. The length was great, so I guess I can't judge it much. I just...really loved it.
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    I'll always think of this whever I encounter one in he games.

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    Yay! More Drabble! Anyway, I really liked the idea for the story, and the story itself was executed well. It really makes you feel bad for that Missingno. It also evoked some bad memories of me playing Pokemon Red when I DID try to catch a Missingno. *shudders* Once again, great job!
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    I get your point, and you illustrated that point well, but I feel like you could have been more efficient with your words. What makes the drabble so hard, besides the word limit, is knowing how to use all those words to create something meaningful. Some of it just felt like filler, like "I'm going to insert a 'well' here because I'm a few words short."

    Well, I am not a glitch. I am not a mistake.
    I felt it would have been stronger without the "well" (I personally interpreted it as hesitation).

    I copied his stupid items.
    I don't know if this is just me, but the "stupid" is off-putting; it makes the melancholy tone drift into somewhat childish territory.

    It's not bad, of course, but you could have been more efficient. With drabbles, the slightest of words can change the tone unintentionally, so you want to be aware of that as well.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Breezy View Post
    I felt it would have been stronger without the "well" (I personally interpreted it as hesitation).
    Quote Originally Posted by Breezy View Post
    I don't know if this is just me, but the "stupid" is off-putting; it makes the melancholy tone drift into somewhat childish territory.
    Both of these are good points. I changed it up, and I think you're right. The "stupid" was a little... stupid, and it read better to me without the "well".

    Quote Originally Posted by Breezy View Post
    It's not bad, of course, but you could have been more efficient. With drabbles, the slightest of words can change the tone unintentionally, so you want to be aware of that as well.
    Thanks.

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