Pokémon Academy

[Skevengal]

Pokémon Academy
Summary: We all know about the world of Pokémon but just how much do we really know about their world? In fact, how much do they know about our world? Who says that in the World of Pokémon they don't play their own Pokémon games either? Our worlds may seem more closer then we think.

Chapter 1 – The World of Pokémon

"Hello there! Welcome to the world of Pokémon!
“Click-” The boy grinned as he pressed the A button.
My name is Oak! People call me the Pokémon Prof! This world is inhabited by creatures called Pokémon!

“Allen!”

“Huh wha-?” said the startled boy as he looked up from underneath his desk only to face a grey haired old woman looking down at him.

“Something under your desk that you'd like to share?” said the lady as she stared fiercely at Allen.

“Erm...No, nothing at all Professor Errol.” said Allen as he tried to put away his Gameboy silently.

“AH! I see that Allen. Hand over the Gameboy.” cried out Professor Errol. Allen reluctantly handed her the Gameboy when a bell rang.

“RINGGGGGGGG”

“Alright class, finish up the chapter for homework and we'll resume from there tomorrow.” She stared menacingly at Allen when she said “And I don't want to see any distractions from now on.” The class giggled as Professor Errol put away the Gameboy in her desk and said “This is mine now. Consequences Mr. Crowe, all of your actions have consequences.”

"Yes yes..." said Allen with his head down.

"Especially for a Pokémon Academy student." said Professor Errol and raised her nose and turned her head pompously.

Yeah, Pokémon Academy. The school for the rich and talented. That's where I attend school. It's a very nice institute and privately funded by an unknown benefactor that wanted to increase the education of Pokémon. Everywhere you look you see pristine white classrooms and floors with computer monitors installed into the desks. What a school. Allen started putting his books in his bag. Allen grabbed his bag and walked out of class. In the hallway he saw a long tree wallpaper. A cheap tall wallpaper in the middle of a white hallway...Who could this possibly be?...

“I know it's you Luke.” Allen said with a sigh. A tall boy appeared behind the wallpaper.

“How did you know it was me?” Luke questioned. Luke was wearing camo cargo pants, with a black T-shirt and a red jacket. It was an attempt at trying to be a ninja, while wearing camouflage patterns and his Pokémon Ranger Jacket. A very pitiful attempt.

“Cause you're the only one stupid enough to try and use a tree wallpaper in a school hallway.” Allen replied smartly.

“I think it's because you have started learning more of the Ninja way since you've been hanging out with me. You should be thankful that you have gained such a keen eye.” said Luke with a smile.

“Actually because of hanging out with you, I feel that I have actually gotten stupider.” Allen said jokingly. “Let's go grab some lunch. I'm starving.” The two headed off to the cafeteria when they saw a small boy jumping up and down trying to reach a tablet that was being held over his head by a large boy with a baseball cap titled to the side and wearing shorts.

“HA! Come get it nerd.” taunted the larger boy.

“Ungh! Ungh!” the smaller boy struggled as he tried to reach the tablet. “Give it back Joey!”

“Just give it to him Joey.” Allen said with a sign. “It's not like you know how to use that thing. You barely know how to wear your hat properly.”

“Oh look, it's that gaming loser and his dork ninja sidekick. You obviously don't know style when you see it.” said Joey as he threw the tablet back at the younger child. The young child was thrown back due to the force but seemed happy that he got his tablet back.

“You okay Dex?” asked Allen.

“Yeah I'm fine Allen. Erm, maybe you should apologize to Joey.” Dex said quickly.

“The nerd's right loser. Say sorry to me.” said Joey

“Maybe we should say sorry.” whispered Luke into Allen's ear.

Allen whispered back to Luke “Wha- No, that's stupid.” Allen turned to face Joey “Why should I apologize?”

“Cause if you don't then I'm gonna beat you up. Duh.” said Joey, “I don't know why you think you're smarter than me if you're dumb enough to challenge me”

“What? I never said anything about a challen-” Allen started.

“Get ready to lose...loser.” Joey started. Wow, real original thought Allen. “We'll battle at the end of school by the gym. You better go find some Pokémon, but it's not even going to matter. My Rattata is in the top percentage of Rattatas.” Joey said proudly. He walked towards Allen, bumping his shoulder into his before he continued to leave.

“That kid is mental.” Allen said.

“He's mental?! Dude, YOU'RE mental.” Luke said, “I mean you just challenged one of the biggest bullies to a Pokémon battle. There's a reason Joey is one of the biggest bullies, it's that he wins all of his Pokémon battles!”

“Joey's win rate is currently 100% with his Rattata.” Dexter cut in. Dexter was a small short boy with round glasses was wearing a white lab coat. He always carried around his tablet with him and was pretty much a walking encyclopedia. “Although this is mainly due to the fact that his opponents don't have Pokémon.”

“Thanks for the support guys.” Allen said sarcastically. “I mean, it's not like I actually challenged him. Joey took it as a challenge. He's probably just going to go bully some other kid and get mad at him instead.”

“I suppose so...I mean, you don't even have a Pokémon right?” said Luke. Pokémon Academy was a specialized school for the talented and the rich. By taking a test and getting high grades on it, about anyone could get into the school. An education and money was required for people to obtain Pokémon, the better of either allowed people to get rarer Pokémon. So at the school, most people didn't have Pokémon yet. But there were few exceptions such as those with noble family lineage.

“Well...Yeah I suppose so,” Luke said, “So what are you gonna do now?”

“How about eating lunch?.” Allen said rubbing his stomach. “I'm starving.” The other two nodded in agreement and they went split off to go on different lines and buy lunch. There were multiple lines ranging from European foods, to Asian, and even to a fast food restaurant line. There were even lines for the students to buy food for their Pokémon such as Poffins and Pokéblocks.

Allen headed over to the Poffin line when the cashier said, “Oh Allen, again?”

“Yeah, I don't have much money today.” Allen replied.

“But Allen, Poffins are for... Pokémon.” the cashier looked worried. “I don't think it's healthy for you to be eating these everyday.”

“Yeah, well when you don't have money, you go eat Poffins. They have all the essential nutrients including major vitamins, minerals, and amino acids.” said Allen. The cashier stared at him strangely. “At least that's what Dex told me.” Allen said with a smile.

The cashier chuckled, “Okay, okay. Here take this one.” As she handed him a piece of bread and winked at him, “This is for humans, it has chocolate inside. I thought you'd be back again today.”

Allen looked back at the cashier and smiled, “Thanks!” He turned around and “WHAP!” Allen bumped into someone.

“Oh sorry sorry,” Allen started as he rubbed his head. “I wasn't looking where I was going.”

“It's okay” said the person. Allen looked up, it was a girl with a bucket in her hands. “I should have been more careful as well.” Allen looked up and saw a young girl with a bandana wrapped around her head and an apron with the Pokémon breeder symbol on it.

“Oh, um...I'm Allen” he said as he stretched out his hand. “Haha don't have money either?”

“Excuse me? Um...That's a weird question. My name's Serena.” replied the girl.[

“She's here to get Poffins for her Pokémon, you know what they're actually for?” said the cashier from the back.

”Wha-?!” Allen was startled. She doesn't seem like she's from any noble family. I wonder how she got her Pokémon. “Well...that's good for you then.” said Allen as he started walking off.

What a strange boy thought Serena.

Allen started walking around a little aimlessly until he saw Luke wave at him from a distant table and headed over there.

“Gettin the poor man's lunch again?” said Luke with a smile. “I probably could have spotted you man.”

“Haha, no I'm okay Luke. But thanks for asking.” said Allen.

“What are you going to do for your match Allen?” asked Dexter.

“Actually, yeah. Now that I think about it, I don't think I've ever seen you with a Pokémon before Al.” said Luke. “Do you even have any?” Allen continued biting into his bread.

After swallowing one last bite, he said “Look guys, I've got this. Okay? Don't worry about me.” Allen turned to Dexter, “Hey Dex, I know that you can play games on your tablet, can I play Pokémon Red version?”

Dexter looked horrified at the the question. “Wh- No, I cannot allow you to do such a thing. This tablet has extremely important data on it and for you to mess around playing games would surely cause trouble.”

“Man, I don't know why you like playing those games so much.” said Luke, “Most people want to train their actual Pokémon ya know? Not some virtual pet.”

“Well, the games are based off true people from this world, you know, your heroes, so I guess it helps inspire me.” Allen shrugged. “Oh well, better start heading to Pokéconomics now.” Allen got up from the table and started walking away. Meanwhile, there was a dark shadow in the bottom of the table and with a pair of menacing eyes it stared at Allen.

[Keldminrachi91]

Hmm, this is definitely very creative. I like the idea of a Pokémon Academy with not only actual Pokémon, but virtual ones as well. I'm not sure if you meant to do this, but the second half of your story is italicized. As a general review, this is what I think.

Your idea is very creative, and unlike some fics, you seem to be able to
A) Use grammar correctly, and
B) Stray away from the very cliché "Trainer goes on journey. Battles gym leaders. Goes to Pokémon League. The end."

Something that could use improving though, is your descriptions. Some fics have very little description of the characters, setting, or anything else. I've seen fics with merely one or two lines of description, and the rest being all dialogue, and sometimes there's a meaning to it. They may think that the best way to let readers see Bob is through very little description, or for Route 22 to be imagined by the readers, and this usually works in fic ideas that are commonly used, like the journey one mentioned above. But, more description would greatly improve this fic. What are the characters wearing? Is this a basic, modern school, or does it take place in the future with technology-oriented things like tablet text books and internet compatible Pokémon? This will especially help when you start introducing Pokémon into your fic, because as I'm sure you know, in a fic you can have three non-shiny Pichu for example, and have every one look different, so you will definitely need more description in your chapters.

“This is mine now.” Consequences Mr. Crowe, all of your actions have consequences.”

The quotation mark after "now" shouldn't be there, if it was still Prof. Errol that was speaking. If it wasn't, you should specify who it is and start on a new line.

A very pitiful attemp.

Attempt? Minor typo; happens to the best of us and can easily be fixed by proofreading and typing it in something like a Word document, because it will usually catch misspelled words like that, but it really depends on the settings you have. Even while typing this on Serebii, it's telling me that "attemp" isn't a word.

"...My Rattata is in the top percentage of Rattatas.” Joey said proudly.

Very witty of you to use this line. I really like it (although I may just be being biased; I've always liked Joey and his line )

Also, a quick note; this is where the rest of story became italicized. Unless you meant to do this, I would recommend fixing it.

Back onto the subject of dialogue, you do a good job of having the characters converse with each other. Their personalities really come through with what they say. It flows easily, and I can imagine people in real life having a conversation like this.

Overall, with a little bit of work on your descriptions, this could be a very good fic!

[deh74]

So Allen was playing a PokeMon video game, but he live in the Pokemon world? Inception much?
I also noticed how the bully is the Joey from the johto games who's always bragging about his ratatta, he always seemed as a billy for me, so nice touch there. It was a but of a slow start but that always happens in the . I'm also intrigued by this rich serena girl ego actually knows the purpose of puffins. Overall I like it so far and will be paying attention to this.

[Skevengal]

Chapter 2 – Joey

“RING” went the school bell.

Ah finally thought Allen, That's the last class. I can finally relax. Allen got up and stretched while smiling and relaxing at the thought of no more classes.

“HEY CROWE!” cried out a voice.

Huh? Allen thought. “Did someone say my name?”

“Haha, are you gonna get beat up by Joey?” said one of Allen's classmates.

Oh boy. I forgot about that last bit. “Haha,” Allen chuckled, “I guess...” Allen grabbed his bag and walked out. He looked at the corner of the classroom and saw a shadow that appeared to have large white eyes staring at Allen. It almost seemed as if it were observing him but Allen turned away and ignored it. Maybe if I leave head to my room fast enough then I won't run into any trouble Allen walked out the door and started increasing his stride. Walking faster, he turned and headed towards the exit when suddenly he heard a voice.

“YO! ALLEN! Get pumped for your match today!” yelled out a voice across the hallway.

Oh that idiot. Now I can't get out of this. “Oh hey there Luke.” Allen said as he slowly turned to face the other energetic boy. “Where's Dex?”

“Oh I dunno. But man you gotta get ready! Got your Pokémon set? Lemme see em'. Eh? A little preview?” Luke asked with a glint in his eyes.

“I don't have them.” replied Allen.

“D-...Don't have them?! WHAT?!” said Luke incredulously. “How are ya supposed to battle then?”

“I'll think of something.” Allen muttered. “Where's the gym again? I can't find anything in this school.”

“I dunno.” said Luke sticking his tongue out.

“Oh right, I forgot that you are just as hopeless with directions as I am.” said Allen with a sigh. “I wish Dex were here, he probably has a map on that tablet of his. Hmm, I guess we'll have to ask someone then.” Allen scanned the room and saw the same pair of white eyes only this time it was up in the ceiling corner. It almost appeared as if it were following him. Allen turned and he saw the girl from the Poffin stand. Ah, It's that girl um...What was her name. Like Selena? Oh no wait, it's Serena. Good thing I caught my self there. Allen started walking toward the girl.

“Hey Serena!” Allen said with a wave. “Hey, how are ya doing? Erm...Where is the school gym?”

Serena seemed astonished at Allen's question. “Are you going to go see that battle that Joey is having?”

“Something like that.” Allen replied.

“I can't believe you would do something like that!” said Serena looking in disbelief. “I think that having Pokémon battle under such forced conditions because their trainers have a fight is just stupid. It's not the Pokémon's fault that their trainers were arguing.”

“Yeah yeah totally, so um...Where is the gym? Said Allen.

“UGH! Boys! They're so clueless. I'm not going to tell you where the gym is.” said Serena as she stuck out her tongue.

Oh boy, this girl is a Pokélover. This is going to be a problem. Gotta think of something... “Oh nono, I think that this fight is stupid. And that's why I'm going there to stop it.” said Allen quickly.

“Oh really?” said Serena as she completely changed her expression, “Haha, okay then just make a left at this hallway and you'll find the gym all the way at the end.”

This girl is so gullible thought Allen. “Oh yeah, um...Thanks.” He turned to Luke, “Yo Luke, let's go,” he turned back to Serena, “See you later Serena!”

“Byebyes” said Luke as he bowed to Serena then made a mad dash towards the gym.

What strange boys Serena thought.

As Allen and Luke headed towards the door of the school gymnasium, they met up with Dexter there. "Hey Dex!" said Luke. “Wait a second...Do you guys see that?” pointing at the shadow with white eyes. It disappeared as the others turned around to face it.

“What are you talking about?” asked Allen.

"There doesn't seem to be anything there, would you like me to scan it?" inquired Dexter.

“No I don't think that's necessary Dex, it doesn't seem like a big deal.” responded Allen.

Dexter looked at Allen in the eyes and said "Well, are you ready for your match? If you tell me what your Pokémon stats are then I can run an analysis for you."

"Haha, nono that's fine. Everyone seems to be asking me if I'm ready but it's not even that big of a deal I mean. what is there like a huge crowd waiting for me?" said Allen jokingly.

At that moment a large student stood by the door, "Entrance fee? And you're gonna have to pay double since the seats are filled up.”

Entrance fee? Filled up?! Wow, this is something thought Allen. “Erm...I-” Allen started.

“This is Allen. He's the one that's gonna be stomp Joey!” said Luke happily.

Oh my god, this kid. thought Allen. “You see, what he meant to say was” but he was cut off once again by a large boy walking through the door.

“Oh there you are loser.” said Joey snidely, “I was wondering when you were finally gonna show up. I thought you had run away. We're going into the challenge gym, let's go.” The Academy had 3 gyms, one for humans, one for the Pokémon, and one for Pokémon battles. The Pokémon battle gym was also known as the challenge gym amongst the students. It was the smallest of the 3 gyms with a sand floor and a single rectangular box marked in white chalk. Despite it's relatively small space, it was crowded with spectators watching the match.

Yeah well unfortunately there is no RUN option here... thought Allen. Allen nodded in agreement. “Well, let's get started shall we?”I might as well get this over with quickly. Allen followed Joey through the gym and he had to maneuver through a crowd of spectators. Wow, this is crazy.

“Alright everyone!” yelled out Joey, “Make some space while you watch me teach this brat a lesson.” He turned to face Allen. “Take out your Pokémon.” Joey took out his own red and white Pokéball as he cried out “GO RATTATA!” A small purple and white rodent creature burst out with a stream of red light from the Pokéball.

“Ratta!” it screeched.

Allen studied the Rattata carefully staying emotionless.

“What's the matter loser? Afraid of it?” taunted Joey. “Oh don't tell me that you couldn't even get a Pokémon ready?”

“Afraid? I'm afraid that this may be over too quickly for the amount of people that have gathered here.” replied Allen. “Come out Haunter.”

A giant menacing shadow appeared from behind Rattata and glared fiercely at it. The Haunter was at least 8 feet tall towering over the tiny Rattata.

“A Haunter?! It should be at least level 25 then!” cried out Dexter from within the crowd. “Rattata wouldn't stand a chance.”

“DEX NO ONE CARES ABOUT THE DAMN LEVEL! DO YOU SEE THAT MONSTER! OH ARCEUS!” yelled out Luke from within the crowd. The Rattata seemed to have acknowledged this fact as well as it tried to scurry away back to it's trainer.

“RATTA!” it squealed.

“Hey! Go back there and do something!” yelled out Joey as his Rattata was approaching him, “Why this stupi....Wah...WAGH!” Joey started screaming as Haunter started approaching him as well. “Pokémon can't attack trainers! Make it stop!”

“Haunter. That's enough.” came the cool voice of Allen. The shadow Pokémon shrunk down and descended down into the ground and vanished. “I did warn everyone.” said Allen with a sigh. Wow, Haunter actually listened this time and thank god too. It would have been horrible if Joey realized that all of Haunter's attacks were ineffective. The other students started running away in a mass hysteria. To see a Pokémon of such size was a great surprise to everyone and the few that actually listened to Dexter were in even more shock as a Pokémon over the level of 20 was incredible. No student that was studying at the Academy ever got their Pokémon to be this strong.

When everyone cleared the gymnasium it was only Allen, Dexter, and Luke left. They were silent for awhile as Dexter and Luke were still in surprise. After a few minutes, Luke was the first to break the silence. “Uh...Hey, Allen?” he questioned, “I know that you were a new student here but um...where'd ya get that Pokémon?”

“I got him as a birthday present when I was 10.” said Allen slowly. “Don't worry about it guys.” Agh, man. This is why I didn't wanna get involved with all this. It's gonna be such a pain explaining to everyone about my Pokémon.”

“Allen.” said Dexter sternly, “To control a Pokémon of such high level you must have gotten a badge right? Where did you get one?”

“I didn't.” came the short reply from Allen.

“You didn't get one? But Haunter backed off right away when you told him too!” said Luke

“Yeah well...He doesn't always listen so I guess I got lucky that time. I mean, he won't even stay in a Pokéball..” said Allen softly.

“Not...Not in a Pokéball? WHAT?! HOW COULD YOU LET THAT GIANT MONSTER ROAM AROUND WITHOUT KEEPING IT IN A POKéBALL!” said Luke with his eyes wide open in shock.

“I concur. I don't believe that it is wise to keep around a large Pokémon with such destructive potential on campus.” replied Dexter. “If you want, I could keep it in my dorm for safe keeping and maybe I could...perform some tests on it?” said Dexter with a slight glint in his eyes.

“Oh Dex. No, I don't think that he'll be able to stay even in there.” said Allen.

“Ah, that reminds me” started Dexter, “How did Haunter get through security if he wasn't in a Pokéball?”

Allen shrugged. “I dunno, it must be that ghostly powers of his. Look guys, I don't have any control of what Haunter does or what he wants to do. He's a free roaming Pokémon.”

“And he's stuck around...you?!” said Luke surprised. Allen glared at him with a scary look in his eyes. “Er...I mean no offense but like...”

“It is quite odd that Haunter would stick around with you for so long if he is trainer-less.” said Dexter.

Before Allen could answer, there was a shout from the doorway “ALLEN!”

“Huh?” said Allen as he turned around and saw a figurine in the doorway with her hands on her hips. She started walking towards the boys with an annoyed look on her face.

“What is this?!” yelled Serena at the boys. “I thought you were going to go stop this fight. I thought...You were a nice person. This is horrible, not only did you not stop the fight but you were the bully that hurt poor Joey!” Serena seemed very annoyed and angry.

“WHAT KIND OF MILTANK POOP IS THAT?!” said Allen astonished. Why that little...He blamed this on me? Wow what a... Allen lost his thoughts as more shouting came from Serena. Yow...How could such a small girl have such a loud voice. “Okay okay, so maybe I did lie to you. But you've got this whole story wrong. You've gotta believe me. Joey challenged ME to a battle and I didn't even want to accept it bu-” Allen was cut off.

“No. I don't even want to hear it, just stop.” said Serena as she ran away and out the door. The lights of the gymnasium turned off and so it was just Allen, Luke and Dexter alone in the gymnasium.

“Why, I never.” started Dex.

“What a strange girl.” said Luke.

“Oh shut up.” said Allen with a sigh.

[Keldminrachi91]

I'll admit it; I like this chapter more than the first one, for multiple reasons.
A) Your description has improved very much; you say what the characters are thinking and how they are reacting to certain things. Although you could go EVEN further, by maybe describing not just where they are, but what it looks like around them, how it sells, etc. Like in the cafeteria, you could describe how all the food that Allen can't afford smells. Or in the gym, you could describe Allen's feelings; was he nervous? Confident? Was there tension in the air?

B) It has some humor in it, and I like when people incorporate some humorous elements into their stories. The two funniest lines I saw were:

Yeah well unfortunately there is no RUN option here...

Hah. A RUN option... Very clever, Skevengal.

“WHAT KIND OF MILTANK POOP IS THAT?!”

Lol. Need I say more?

I didn't notice any obvious grammatical errors, but I would recommend something. It would be nice if you italicized all of your characters thoughts. It just makes it easier to see, that's all. No problem if you don't want to, though.

[Jake76]

Well this was actually fairly refreshing! Typically, I hate trainer academy fics. The Pokeworld pretty clearly states that anyone can start their journey once they turn 10 years old so I've never understood why anyone would choose to go to the academy. So good on you for just focusing on writing a story. Overall, I liked your description and characterization. It was very easy to picture everything going on without much effort. Obviously, I can't judge your plot too much...it's not really in place yet. Anyways, I'll continue to read so good luck in the future!

[Skevengal]

Chapter 3 - The Headmaster

"PROFESSOR! AHHH! HELP!" came a shrill cry that could be heard down the long hallway. "ANYONE! QUICK!" Following this scream, footsteps could be heard rapidly in succession as finally a terrified figure could be seen at the end of the hallway. "H-H-HELP!" said Joey desperately as he raced down the hallway. Murmurs of the other students quickly rose in volume as news of Allen's Haunter spread as fast as Pokérus.

~~~

"Allen, come on bro. Get up." said Luke as he started shaking Allen's motionless body in his bed. They were in the Boy's Dorm room and this was the morning after the incident with Joey.

"Uggggh, I don't wanna go out there!" whined Allen. "Everyone's gonna be really annoying."

"Yeah well if you don't get up soon then I'm gonna be just as annoying then." said Luke. "Don't you dare leave me alone in PokéHistory. I literally have to drink Awakenings to pay attention."

"UGH!" came Allen's muffled reply as he dove himself into his pillows.Wow, this Academy provides some really nice pillows. It all comes along with the prestige I suppose. "Fine fine, I'll get dressed...Uh. Hey."

"Yeah?" came Luke's reply.

"Got any of those ninja clothes? I kinda wanna stay hidden." said Allen sheepishly.

"DUDE!" said Luke rolling his eyes.

"Okay, okay fine. Let's go." said Allen as he got up from bed.

After they had finished gotten dressed, Allen had decided on a sweatshirt and pulled the hood over his head.

"You're being really stupid." said Luke.

"That's a bit offensive coming from you." came Allen's sharp reply.

"Meh." Luke said with a shrug.

~~~

Upon arriving to class, it was just as Allen had predicted. Everyone was crowding around him for questions about Haunter and Allen tried his best to avoid everything. Luckily, Luke seemed to be enjoying the new found attention. As Allen slipped out of the side of the crowd he noticed two people that were sitting down and were merely observing the crowd. Those two people were Joey and Serena. Joey had a nasty scowl on his face as if he had smelt something horrible and Serena looked at Allen with eyes that seemed to scream out "I trusted you!". Well. I knew there was trouble when I walked in. thought Allen.

"Alright class, everyone back to their seats. Let us resume class." said Mr. Gurder. "Now turn your textbooks to page 37 and we will-" Mr. Gurder was cut off by a knock at the door. "Ah, yes?" Mr. Gurder questioned.

A tall man walked through the door and took a quick glance around the room. He was in a black suit and sported a Fedora resembling that of a mafia mob member. He seemed to be looking for someone. Hmmm, I wonder which one the boy is. He cleared his throat and spoke "Ahem, I'm looking for a...Allen Crowe. Where is he?"

Mr. Gurder scanned the room for Allen and then responded, "Ah there he is. Go on then Allen."

Allen got up from his seat slowly as he cautiously approached the man. Oh man. What's going on. What are they going to do? Thoughts were racing all around Allen's head as he was anxious to see what was going to happen. When he approached the tall man he asked "What's going on?"

The mysterious man was stoic in expression and merely responded, "Follow me." He turned around and was off. Allen had to jog at a light pace to keep up with the tall man's stride. They were silence the entire walk as neither person tried to initiate conversation. The tall man finally reached an elevator and pushed the up button and the doors slid open. He turned to Allen and said "After you." Allen walked into the elevator and heard the door shut behind him as he realized that the tall man was not in the elevator.

"Wha-" Allen started. What's going on here? Where did that man go? The elevator rumbled and then started going upward. That's odd. I didn't press any buttons. After going up several flights the elevator stopped and the doors slid open. Allen walked out of the elevator and took a look at the room he was in. It was a small very basic room with a single desk and a chair on each side of it. There was an elderly man on one end of the desk.

"Take a seat." the old man commanded. Allen did as he was told and sat down. "HUGO! VICTOR!" the old man shouted. From the other end of the room opposite the elevator a door slid open and the same tall man from before walked through. Following him was a large muscular man with a handlebar moustache and had blonde hair. They stood on each side of the old man and stared Allen down.

"That's the same guy from before! How did he get here?" blurted out Allen.

The old man turned to Allen with a scoff. "Child, do you know nothing of this school? This is Victor, our school's specialist and the big fellow over there is Hugo our head of security."

"Specialist...of what?" asked Allen.

"That doesn't concern you as of now. What we need to talk about is how you managed to bring in a high level Haunter into the facilities." responded the old man.

"To be honest, I don't know. He just kind of...followed me." said Allen shrugging his shoulders. "And who are you?"

The old man laughed as he turned to Victor. "Ohoho, Victor who is this boy?"

Victor responded, "That is Allen Crowe, a Freshman at the academy. He had full marks on his entrance exam, Headmaster."

Allen dropped his jaw. He was speaking to the Headmaster? Oh my goodness. I'm an idiot.

"Ah...So, you're a talented child aren't you?" the headmaster chuckled as he eyed Allen carefully. "Is there anything we should know about how you acquired that Haunter though?"

"Well..." Allen thought for a moment before he decided to answer. "He was given to me on my 10th birthday and the Pokéball that he was in broke. So ever since then he has been roaming around. He doesn't even listen to anything I say."

"But why is he here in the Academy then? A Pokémon like that sounds like a wild one. There's no reason that he should be in this building." said the Headmaster as he eyed Allen carefully.

"I don't know. He just seems to follow me around though." Allen shrugged. "Look I'm sorry but there's not much I can tell you."

"But you managed to use him when you battled a student here?" questioned the Headmaster.

"That was a...special case. I guess he's protective of me then." said Allen slowly.Oh shoot. I should stop before I let something slip. I gotta get out of here."May I go to class now?" Allen asked politely.

"Well, it seems that you don't know anymore that can help us. No matter. A team has been dispatched to capture Haunter right now." said the Headmaster with a grin. It seemed wickedly evil. "But it doesn't matter since that Haunter is not yours...right?"

"Ah, of course. It's nothing. I'll head back to class then." Allen got up slowly and headed towards the elevator. Damnit! I have to find Haunter and get him out of here. Allen walked through the sliding doors and was on his way back to class.

"Sir, do you think that he knows?" asked Victor.

"He probably does, but we'll just have to observe him for now. Keep watch of him Victor, and Hugo go check on that Haunter capture team." ordered the Headmaster.

"Yes sir." they both said in unison as they bowed and walked away.

[pacman000]

Hey! I read this yesterday, and now a new chapter is up. Thank you for not abandoning it.

You have an interesting premise. I wonder what Haunter is up to. Why does it follow Allen? And what does the headmaster know?

Everyone was crowding around him for question about Haunter and Allen tried his best to avoid everything.

That should be "questions," shouldn't it?

From the other end of the room opposite the elevator a door slid open and the same tall man from before walked through.

Also, I believe there should be a comma or two somewhere in here. Sadly, I'm not sure where. Perhaps at the end of "room" and the end of "elevator"?

[Keldminrachi91]

I like the new chapter. Overall, there was less dialogue and MUCH more description, so kudos to you on that. I like how you made the Headmaster seem very...Mysterious. Kind of reminds me of Shadows of Almia

"Yeah, well if you don't get up soon then I'm gonna be just as annoying then."

IMO, there probably should've been a comma after 'yeah'. It just flows better, but it really depends on how you read it.

After they had finished gotten dressed, Allen had decided on a sweatshirt and pulled the hood over his head.

Gotten should probably be getting, but even then the sentence is a little awkward. Maybe something like "Allen had decided to wear a sweatshirt for the day. He pulled the hood over his head." It's pretty basic, but with some thought it could be improved upon. Plus I just came up with it off the top of my head.

"You're being really stupid." said Luke.

"That's a bit offensive coming from you." came Allen's sharp reply.

Haha. I like these lines. I can't remember off the top of my head if you mentioned their age, but based on personal experience + their personalities, I would guess these kids are around a pre-teen age, at the most 13. Which makes me want to bring up Jake67's point of why kids would go to an academy. You should probably explain why they're here in greater detail. I'm not trying to say your idea is bad; I really like it, but you should explain more in coming chapters.

Hmmm, I wonder which one the boy is.
Oh man. What's going on. What are they going to do?
What's going on here? Where did that man go?
That's odd. I didn't press any buttons.
Oh my goodness. I'm an idiot.
Oh shoot. I should stop before I let something slip. I gotta get out of here.
Damnit! I have to find Haunter and get him out of here.

These were all thoughts of people, and thus in italics. Personally, when I type people's thoughts, I put them on a new line + treat it like dialogue. This is just personal preference, but it's just a little tid-bit. Oh, also, the bolded period should be a question mark.

Overall, your writing is definitely improving, as far as description goes. I haven't noticed many grammatical errors throughout the whole fic, which is definitely a good thing. I'm excited to read the fourth chapter of this.

[Skevengal]

Chapter 4 - Haunter

"DEX!" was all that the small boy heard as he was violently shook from behind.

"Wha-Woah!" cried out Dexter. He spun around to come face to face with a shadowy figure. "Who are you?" he questioned.

"No time. Give me your tablet." ordered the stranger. Dexter did as he was told. The figure grabbed the tablet and ran out of sight.

What was that about? thought Dexter.

~~~

"KACK!" The door swung open and 4 men dressed in a riot squad attire rushed into the room.

"Well...Hello there." said Allen. Allen was leaning back on his bed frame playing on his Gameboy.

"We had been ordered to search this room. Please evacuate the premises." said one of the men sharply. Allen simply shrugged and got up and walked out of the room calmly. Well they're not going to find Haunter in there. Oh well. Allen had tried his best to convey the danger that Haunter was in earlier that afternoon but Haunter had merely stuck his tongue out at Allen and faded away into the shadows. Whatever that damn ghost does, it's out of my hands.


Dexter had turned to a Desktop PC for work as his tablet was gone. Finally calming down from his sudden alert, Dexter had gotten ready to resume his work when he had another surprise waiting for him. As his computer was booting up in the computer monitor he saw another shadowy figure approach him from behind. As Dexter turned around he was smacked with something hard.

Dexter awoke several hours later with his tablet back in his hands leaving Dexter to only further question the shadowy figure's actions that day.

~~~

1 Week later

"Come in Allen." said the Headmaster. Allen walked through the large office door and sat down on the seat across from the Headmaster.

"What do you need me for?" questioned Allen.

"It appears that we are not able to locate Haunter at the moment and he has not shown up at all lately. I was wondering if maybe you knew anything about this incident?" said the Headmaster eyeing Allen very carefully.

"Oh really? No, I had assumed that you had already caught Haunter." said Allen. They don't have Haunter? I thought that foolish spectre was finally caught.

"Ah I see. Well then, as it appears that this problem has simply disappeared, there's no need to investigate this further now is there?" said the Headmaster with a slight smile. "Carry on then. You are dismissed."

"Oh okay then. Well thank you Headmaster, I'll get going now." said Allen politely and with a slight bow he left the office. Wow, that takes a load off. Looks like Haunter peacefully left. Allen turned the corner of the hallway, Hey, isn't that...Dex? Wow he doesn't look so good. "Hey Dex!" said Allen with a cheerful smile. Dexter looked at Allen with a sullen face and dark circles under his eyes. His eyes seem to be fixated on his tablet screen.

Dexter looked up from his tablet. "A-Allen..." he muttered as he continued walking forward.

What happened? He's like a zombie. "Uh...Dex?" Allen called out. Dexter ignored him and continued walking along, still focusing on this tablet while walking. Allen paused for a moment as he carefully observed Dexter as he walked along the corridor. Dexter seemed to be playing a game, it was...Pokémon Red! "HEY DEX!" said Allen with a change in tone. Oh my goodness no. Allen ran up to Dexter and snatched the tablet out of Dexter's hands and looked at the screen. It was Red in Cinnabar Island but there was a Pokémon behind his sprite. It appeared to look like a ghost. Allen pressed the side on the D-pad and clicked A to have Red interact with the ghost. The ghost was a Haunter. Allen almost dropped Dex's tablet in horror.

Why is a Haunter in this game? That shouldn't happen. Why is it following Red around?! Does this have anything to do with Dexter? thoughts raced through Allen's head but they were interrupted from a moan that Dexter made.

"Allen...My head...The nightmares." whispered Dexter but it was so quiet that it was almost inaudible.

"Don't worry, I'll get you out of here man." said Allen as he picked up Dexter and carried him in his arms. Wow, Dexter is seriously light. But I don't remember him being this frail before. This can't possibly be good.
Allen ran off towards the Nurse's office.

At the Nurse's office, Allen burst through the doors panting. "Can anyone help me?!" he shouted.

The Nurse walked on over and said "What seems to be the problem?"

Allen held up Dexter's weak body and said "Him. Help, please." The Nurse motioned for Allen to bring Dexter over to the one of the nearby beds.

"I'll see what I can do. Leave it to me." said the Nurse as she rushed to get her tools. Allen nodded and walked off and just noticed that he still had Dexter's tablet in hand. He looked at the screen again and wondered why Haunter seemed to be in this game. I wonder if this Haunter is the same Haunter that went missing a few days ago. Allen dismissed all thoughts and headed back to his room. It had been a long day and both him and Dexter would need to recover because that night would be the night when Allen would experience the nightmares.