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    So when is the new chapter coming up? I don't want to rush you, but you usually post once in a while.
    Witness the truly awesome power of my claimed Gyarados.

    Gyarados used Epic Awesomeness!
    It's super effective!
    The foe lost OVER 9000% of its health!

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    Chronicles of Unova

    Chapter 18: Pranksters

    The afternoon sun was beginning to crest behind Twist Mountain as the group trekked on through Route 7. With Skyla’s Jet Badge now added to their collection, the next destination in their continuing journey would be Icirrus City across the imposing mountain range; there they would meet Brycen, the Icirrus City Gym Leader and a specialist of Ice-types. It was a long journey through the winding mountain pass of Route 7, and then they would have to make their way through the interior of Twist Mountain itself; the journey would take several days, so finding a place to set up camp for the night was becoming their immediate focus as the receding sun reminded them of the time. The weather was growing ever colder as autumn slowly shifted into winter; the leaves had all now changed colors, many having fallen to the ground, and the bracing breezes that had sharpened their minds through most of Central and Western Unova were now turning to a perpetual gnawing sting. Finding somewhere to camp in the chilly foothills of the valley would be difficult; the terrain was rocky and uneven. What’s more, dark storm clouds were quickly pushing their way south over the mountains. Cheren broke the silence conversationally.

    “That storm’s coming in awfully fast…” he mused. “Seems almost unnatural the way it’s fighting past the top of the mountain like that.” he continued. David nodded in agreement.

    “Even if we can’t find an optimal site, we need to make sure to have our tent set up before the storm gets here.” he replied. “I don’t want to be fighting with that Godforsaken thing in the dark, the cold, and the rain.” he continued.

    “It’s too bad we never had to use it before now…” Bianca chimed up, frowning. “The weather has always been so nice when we’ve had to camp out that we’ve never needed it; do you boys still even remember how to set it up?” she continued. Cheren raised his eyebrow and turned to look at her as they walked.

    ‘You boys?’” he asked. “You have to help us too you know, Bianca.” he continued. “I have no qualms with kicking you out in the rain if you don’t help us…” he said with a small laugh sarcastically, but David took it literally and shot him an angry glare.

    “I do.” he said sharply. “You’d make a lady do manual labor out in the middle of the mountains in late autumn with a storm coming in, and then kick her out in the rain if she didn’t sufficiently enough? How chivalrous of you…” he continued. Bianca smiled and subtly brushed her hand up against David’s at his comment; David smiled back briefly, but Cheren interrupted, oblivious to their gestures.

    “You’ve been letting Paula get to you with all her ‘Victorian etiquette’ bullshit now that she’s a Gardevoir, haven’t you?” he asked. “Pardon my pragmatism, but I think those conditions exemplify exactly the kind of situation where it’d be all-hands-on-deck. ‘Chivalry’ has no place out here.” he continued. “Ever since you two became an item, you’ve been getting more and more soft, David. Bianca used to do guy stuff with us when we were kids in Nuvema Town, remember? What’s next, you gonna start reading Cosmopolitan Clefairy and Vespiquen Vogue too?” he asked mockingly. David stared at him vacantly.

    “Uh… yeah, Bianca used to do guy stuff with us as kids in Nuvema Town, Cheren, but the key words there are ‘as kids.’” he said carefully. “We used to sneak up behind you and yank your little Togepi tighty-whiteys up over your head when you weren’t looking back then too, but we grew up, Cheren; we’re 18-years-old now and adults. You and I aren’t little kids anymore and Bianca’s a grown woman. I guess if you want to still be a kid though, that’s fine; what do you say, Bianca? Want to go for an old grab-and-yank for old time’s sake?” he asked fiendishly. Bianca laughed in a deep tone but Cheren moved away nervously out of habit. David laughed too at his friend’s residual fear.

    “Goddamn it, you assholes, don’t!” Cheren said, quickly stepping out of their reach and putting his hands over his butt. “Fine, Bianca can sit on her fat ass and eat bonbons while we fight with that stupid tent if it’ll make you feel like a big man; just don’t screw with my underwear…” he continued timidly. There was a kind of whine to his voice that made David and Bianca both crack up laughing.

    “Well I think it’s very sweet of David, Cheren.” Bianca mused softly as they finished laughing. “It’s not about ‘gender roles’ or ‘division of work,’ it’s called ‘being polite to girls,’ and I appreciate it.” she continued. Cheren rolled his eyes and relaxed his stance.

    “Of course you do; you’re not the one who’s going to have to fight with that tent…” he muttered, but they didn’t hear him.

    “Well, it’s still pretty early, but I think we’re going to have to just stop here.” David said. The dark clouds had made their way past the peak of Twist Mountain as they had been talking and were now almost overhead. The storm clouds threatened rain at any moment and blocked out what remained of the sun. David anticipated they should have enough time to set up camp before the rains started, but his prediction proved to be wrong.

    “Come on, Cheren, let’s get the tent set-” he started to say, but a clap of thunder cut his comment short. Bianca yelped in surprise at the noise; as if on cue with the thunder, a massive downpour started immediately as the sound hit their ears. The rain was instant and torrential; there was no gradual gradient, but instead just began dumping on them right out of the gate. The group flinched in surprise and began running with their bags and jackets over their heads to try and stay dry.

    So much for the tent!” Cheren shouted over the noise from the heavy rain hitting the ground. “What do we do now?!” he asked.

    We’ve got to find some cover under a tree or in a cave or something!” David shouted back. “Just keep running and keep your eyes peeled!” he continued. Another crack of thunder sounded from off in the distance, causing them to redouble their efforts.

    Hey! Over here!” a muffled female voice cried.

    What?!” David shouted. “What did you say, Bianca?” he asked. Bianca turned to look at him in surprise.

    I didn’t say anything!” she said as she ran. David began to question her further, but the mysterious voice interrupted him again.

    Hey! You three! Over here!” the woman’s voice shouted. The group looked around for the source of the sound but saw nothing. They kept running through the heavy rain and blustering winds, eventually reaching a clearing in the mountainous woods. A small cabin was nestled amongst the rocks and an elderly woman was at the door. The light from inside drew their eyes toward it and silhouetted her figure against the frame of the door; she waved to draw their attention, motioning for them to come in, and then shut the door to keep the water out. David looked at his friends quizzically, but with no other option, decided to go for it. They sprinted the rest of the way towards the cabin, but the rocky, loose ground was beginning to grow slick from all of the rainwater. There was a big mud puddle along their path to the cabin; David and Cheren hopped over it, but Bianca was not so observant.

    Watch out for the mud, Bianca!” David called over his shoulder. The winds and thunder made it difficult to hear though, even though he was shouting; Bianca didn’t hear him.

    What?!” she shouted. “What did you- WHOOOA!” she screamed. She stepped right into the mud and felt her foot slide out from under her. She slipped and fell face-first into the damp soil, covering her whole body in it. She coughed and choked as she rose, spitting a little bit of mud out of her mouth. Cheren kept running, unaware of her fall, but David stopped and doubled back to help her; he grabbed her hand and pulled her up, helping her run the rest of the way to the cabin. Upon reaching the awning over the porch, the group stopped to catch their breath.

    “Are you alright, Bianca?” David asked in concern. “You took a pretty hard fall.” he continued. Bianca was coughing violently to try and clear her throat of the mud she had accidentally swallowed.

    “Yeah… yeah, I’m okay…” she rasped. “It’s this skirt; I can’t stretch my legs very far in it.” she continued. David helped brush the mud off of her soaked clothing as Cheren beat on the door.

    “It’s open!” the woman shouted from inside. Cheren turned back towards his friends and nodded; they returned the gesture as Cheren opened the door.

    “… h-hello?” he asked cautiously as it swung open. The inside of the small, one-room cabin was warmly lit and rustically furnished. On the left was a modest kitchen, and on the right was a sitting area with a TV and a bed along the far wall. The elderly woman stood in the kitchen on their left with a nervous look on her face, and a man of comparable age sat in a leather recliner next to the TV, watching them as well. A Snubbull was asleep on the rug in front of the man. The woman gasped and ran up to help upon seeing them.

    “Oh come in, come in, you poor dears! Come in out of the rain. Let’s get you… oh dear!” she said, stopping herself as she noticed Bianca. “Oh sweetheart, did you fall in the mud?” she asked. “Oh you poor thing, you’re just covered in it! Let’s get you out of those wet, dirty clothes. Come on in, make yourselves at home.” she continued. The group tiredly slogged their way into the house as their adrenaline rush died down, their muscles aching and their bodies soaked to the bone. They painstakingly took seats on bar stools lining an island in the middle of the kitchen and began removing their wet clothing as the woman went to fetch dry ones.

    “Thank you, ma’am; this is very kind of you.” David said through a tired voice. The woman took their wet clothing and handed each of them a robe to wear over their undergarments. She then scuttled off to the kitchen behind them and began stirring the contents of a pot with a ladle, waving her hand dismissively.

    “Think nothing of it, hon; we couldn’t just let you freeze to death out there.” she replied. She put the lid back on the pot and turned to face them, wiping her hands on her apron; she sighed and smiled, looking up at them as she finished her task. “What are your names?” she asked interestedly.

    “I’m David.” David said.

    “Cheren…” Cheren muttered tiredly.

    “My name is Bian-ca-CHOO!” Bianca said, sneezing violently and unexpectedly as she tried to say her name. She sniffled and slouched forward in her seat, rubbing her nose with a glazed look in her eyes.

    “Bless you, love.” the elderly woman replied. “It’s lovely to meet you three. My name is Muriel; this is my husband, Eustace, and our pet Snubbull, Courage.” she continued. Eustace raised his hand to greet them and the Snubbull stirred from his nap as he heard his name. The group of trainers murmured a greeting in return.

    “Thank you again for your hospitality, Muriel; we’ll be out of your hair as soon as the storm lets up.” David said. Muriel began to reach for some bowls in the cupboard behind her as she replied.

    “Nonsense, love, you all are welcome to spend the night; the storm probably won’t pass until morning anyway.” she responded. David seemed confused.

    “Oh? Do you get storms like this often?” he asked conversationally. Muriel nodded solemnly as she set out three bowls.

    “Yes, I’m afraid we do.” she replied. “Tell me, kids… did the storm come over Twist Mountain as if it was fighting to get here? And did it start abruptly, as if it was targeting you almost?” she continued. The group opened their eyes wide in surprise at her startling accuracy.

    “Well actually, now that you mention it, yeah, it did kind of seem like that.” Cheren answered. “It started really suddenly, and it came over the mountains awfully fast.” he continued. Muriel sighed at his answer.

    “Goddamn it, Muriel, when are those two hooligans ever going to just piss off?” Eustace muttered from across the room. Muriel sighed and took the lid off of the pot on the stove; she began ladling the contents out into the bowls. “You want to tell ‘em or me?” he continued.

    “No no, dear, I’ll tell them. Here kids, have some soup; it’ll warm you up.” she started to say. “There’s something about that storm you ought to know…” she continued through a quiet voice.

    * * *

    As the storm outside continued to pour down rain and beat against the windows, the group huddled around the living room within the warmth of the cabin to hear Muriel’s story. Muriel joined her husband in a seat beside the television; David, Bianca and Cheren sat on their bar stools, slowly chipping away at her hearty soup. Thoroughly stirred from his nap now, Courage rose and hopped up on Muriel’s lap to be pet. Once she had settled in, Muriel laid her hands over the small Pokémon and began to speak.

    “That storm out there is not a natural phenomenon. Are you familiar with the Pokémon Tornadus or Thundurus?” she asked. David and Bianca shook their heads “no,” but Cheren nodded “yes.”

    “They’re Legendaries of the Unova region, right?” he asked. Muriel nodded in affirmation and started to reply, but Bianca sneezed and cut her off.

    “Ah-choo!” she exclaimed with a squeak.

    “Bless you, dear.” Muriel said politely. “That’s correct, Cheren, they are Legendary Pokémon, although their legends are not exactly favorable.” she replied. “Tornadus and Thundurus are powerful kami who can control the winds, the rains and lightning. They are also notoriously horrible pranksters though; they have plagued the Unova region for centuries with storms and torrential downpours. For some reason, no matter how far around the region they roam, they always seem to return here, to the base of Twist Mountain; some say it is their home, which is why we have made it our own home too.” she continued. She was silent for a moment, lost in thought, but Bianca sneezed again and broke her concentration.

    “Ah-CHOO!” she sneezed violently. Her body shook from the force of the sneeze. David looked at her worriedly.

    “Are you okay, Bianca?” he asked, putting his arm on her shoulder. Bianca sniffled and smiled at him.

    “Yeah, I’m okay. Just sneezing a lot…” she said tiredly. Muriel continued with her story.

    “Eustace and I have seen this storm many times in our lives; we made our home here to help trainers who stray into their path. Centuries of lore in the Unova region tell of massive downpours like the one you were caught in, appearing suddenly and without warning. The clouds seem to move unnaturally and the rain seems to target the people caught in the storm, following them as they try to escape. Tornadus and Thundurus have wicked, mischievous hearts and like to play tricks on those that they view as inferior. They’re out there somewhere and decided to have some fun with you.” she explained.

    “They’re nothing but a pair of stupid dogs.” Eustace chimed in spitefully. “We used to try and grow crops to sustain ourselves, but those bastards always came and destroyed them just before we were set to harvest.” he continued. “If those two ever showed up around here in person, why I’d-” he started to say, but Bianca sneezed again and cut him off.

    AH-CHOO!” she sneezed in a deep, echoing tone. Her sneezes were getting more and more violent. She nearly shook herself out of her seat with the last one. She set her bowl down on the counter with a “clang!” and put a hand to her forehead woozily, sniffling and breathing heavily.

    “Bianca, seriously, are you alright? You look really flush.” David said with clearly defined concern in his voice. He put an arm around her back to steady her and put the other one on her forehead to gauge her temperature; she felt very warm.

    “I must have caught a cold from falling in the mud…” she said. She was starting to pant and seemed unable to catch her breath; David could feel her start to tremble.

    “Why don’t you come lay down, dear?” Muriel said, starting to rise cautiously.

    “No no, I’m fine, I’m fine.” Bianca assured her. “It’s just a cold, I’m fine. Just a cold… just a cold… just… uh…” she continued to say, but she trailed off. She started to sway violently and David had to restrain her to keep her from falling. Her eyes rolled into the back of her head and her whole body went limp without warning.

    Bianca!” David said in shock as he reached out to catch her; she was out like a light. She shivered and trembled in his arms, gripped by a sudden seizure.

    “Quick, David, set her up here in the bed! Eustace, go boil some water.” Muriel said, rising from her seat quickly. David struggled to lift his girlfriend, but carried her to the bed and nestled her beneath the plush comforter.

    “What happened? What’s wrong with her?!” David asked as he hovered over her unconscious form. “A cold couldn’t have made her just up and pass out like that!” he continued. Muriel sighed as she gathered some rags and extra blankets.

    “I was afraid of this…” she said under her breath. “For all our time trying to stop them, I never thought I’d live to see it personally…” she continued. She was busily darting about the room, trying to collect things to treat Bianca. She ignored David’s question, which only made him grow more concerned.

    “Muriel, what are you talking about? Live to see what? What’s wrong with her?!” he asked, starting to panic.

    “We can still save her, there is still time…” Muriel said to herself, but she still seemed unhearing of David’s questions. David grit his teeth and rose from Bianca’s side. He reached out and grabbed a hold of Muriel’s wrist to stop her. She turned to face him and looked David straight in the eyes.

    “Muriel, what happened to her?” he asked slowly. Muriel sighed and lowered her head.

    “David, Cheren… I’m sorry…” she started to say in a timid voice. “The rainwater from the storm can have a… err… adverse reaction, on some people’s immune system.” she continued.

    “What kind of a reaction is that?” Cheren murmured.

    Your friend has caught the Kami’s Curse.” Muriel said ominously.

    * * *

    A dull buzz from Paula’s Heal Pulse filled the room as she tried to stabilize Bianca’s condition. David, Cheren and Muriel hovered around her as she attempted to do her work. Eustace dipped a rag into the boiling water he had prepared and laid it over her forehead to try and calm her. It seemed to do the trick as she finally stopped seizing. David let out a sigh of relief; Muriel solemnly began to speak.

    “I’m sorry, boys, there is a bit more to the story of Tornadus and Thundurus than I was able to get to before she fell into her coma.” she murmured. “There is another… a third kami who counterbalances the first two: Landorus, the abundance Pokémon.” she continued. Muriel and Cheren went to go sit back down, but David stayed by Bianca’s side as Paula continued to use Heal Pulse.

    “Tornadus, Thundurus and Landorus are brothers, with Landorus being the eldest and Tornadus and Thundurus being twins. The younger brothers’ storms always left the communities they ravaged destroyed, but Landorus always came behind them and used the abundant rainwater to help the destroyed settlements’ crops grow; he would pick up the pieces of his brothers’ messes and provide a silver lining to the people whose homes they had destroyed.” Muriel explained.

    “What does this have to do with Bianca?” David asked. “What is ‘the Kami’s Curse?’” he continued.

    “When she fell in the mud out there, did she accidentally swallow any of it?” Muriel asked quietly. David nodded, causing her to sigh. “Maybe it is out of spite, I don’t know, but Tornadus and Thundurus do not use regular rainwater for their storms. Legends tell of people occasionally getting sick when they ingest the water. There is something they put in it that has a very adverse reaction on certain people; they call it the Kami’s Curse.” she explained. “Some people can drink it by the gallon and be fine, but others are effected almost instantly. The victims are overcome by sudden lightheadedness shortly after ingesting the contaminated water and fall into an unbreakable coma. It is almost indistinguishable from pneumonia from that point on, except that they cannot awaken from the sleep. Many people have died because the local doctors could not distinguish it from pneumonia in time. I had hoped I would never personally have to treat it, but there is a way…” she continued. David rose quickly and darted towards her.

    Bianca could DIE from this?!” he stammered in surprise. “What are you waiting for? What’s the cure?!” he asked. Muriel lowered her head and sighed yet again.

    “David… I’m sorry…” she murmured. “There is a paste made from certain berries that the inflicted person has to eat, but the problem is that one of the berries is almost impossible to obtain. I have kept a store of the other four on hand for years out of fear that something like this might happen, but I don’t have the last ingredient. It would be suicide to try and retrieve it now.” she continued. David shot her an angry glare.

    “How about you not lecture me on the dangers of retrieving this last ingredient when my girlfriend’s life is on the line.” he said sternly. “What is it?” he asked. Muriel looked away with tears in her eyes.

    “David… your passion is admirable, but-” she started to say, but David cut her off.

    What. Is. It?” he said again slowly and commandingly. Muriel lowered her head and began to reply.

    “It’s called a Wacan berry.” she said quietly and dejectedly. “Regular Wacan berries are very common; when used in a Pokémon battle, they will reduce the damage taken from an Electric-type attack if the holder is weak to it. Wacan berries are able to achieve this feat by absorbing energy from lightning strikes when they grow. However, if watered by Tornadus’ rain and struck by Thundurus’ lightning, they can be combined with certain other berries to form the paste which cures the Kami’s Curse. I have some Wacan seeds, but someone would have to go out in the storm, plant them, and then get Thundurus himself to strike the spot with lightning; even then, we would have to allow time for them to grow. I’m sorry, David… I don’t know what more to do…” she whispered. She lowered her head and began to gently weep.

    “While I do not wish to aggravate the situation, I believe she is correct, master.” Paula spoke up timidly. “I cannot break through and reach Ms. Bianca’s mind as I could when you were rendered unconscious in Relic Castle. I am keeping her stable for the moment with my Heal Pulse, but there is no forward momentum.” she continued. David laid a hand on her shoulder and nodded in appreciation and acknowledgement. He turned back towards Cheren and Muriel with fire burning in his eyes and a calm smile on his lips. Cheren was trying to console his weeping, elderly host, but turned to look at David with a worried look in his eyes as he drew near.

    “Give me the seeds, Muriel. I’m going.” David said unfalteringly. Muriel shot her head up in shock to look at him.

    “No, you mustn’t!” she said in fear. “You’ll get yourself killed out there!” she continued, but David was resolute.

    “Yeah, and Bianca will die if I don’t!” he shouted. “I have to at least try.” he continued. Before Muriel could respond however, Cheren spoke up.

    “David, I know you care a lot about Bianca and so do I, but it’s a pretty big logical jump from ‘she shouldn’t have to help us set up the tent because she’s a girl’ to ‘I’m going to go screw with a pair of spiteful Legendaries to try and save her life.’ Weigh the risks, man; is being the big macho ‘protector/provider’ role worth getting yourself killed too?” he asked. David considered his words, but approached Muriel slowly after a moment of silence. He knelt down to her height in the chair and took a hold of her hands to calm her.

    “Muriel, I’m going.” he said. “I can use my Joltik to draw Thundurus’ lightning from a safe distance and I don’t have to go far. Please just tell me where the seeds are.” he continued. Muriel dried her eyes and pointed to a kitchen cabinet.

    “In the back…” she said timidly. David nodded and retrieved the package, heading back across the room to put his still-damp clothing back on. He approached the door after dressing and drew Joltik’s Pokéball with determination.

    “Shall I come with you, master?” Paula asked.

    “No, you stay here, Paula. Keep her alive as long as you can with Heal Pulse; I’ll be back before you know it.” he replied telepathically. Paula nodded and kept at her work. David stepped back out into the storm and vanished into the darkness…

    * * *

    David stepped outside and shut the door behind him. The rain and lightning had slowed a bit, but picked up again strongly as David reemerged; Tornadus and Thundurus certainly deserved the “prankster” moniker Muriel had described them with. David clung tightly to Joltik’s Pokéball and lowered his head, setting out to find a clearing under which to plant the seeds. The rain was not only coming down in large quantities, but at a startlingly fast velocity as well; it stung David’s body as it pelted his jacket. The freezing, howling autumn wind felt all the more frozen thanks to his clothes being drenched, and lightning strikes hit the mountainside in the distance seemingly every dozen seconds or so. David put these things out of his mind however and thought only of Bianca’s innocent, all-consuming beauty, focusing on his motivation for doing this in the first place; time seemed to pass quickly as a result and he eventually came upon a clearing on top of a small hill he could plant the seeds upon. He knelt down and dug out a small hole in the mud, burying a handful of the seeds below the surface. Tornadus’ rain continued to come down in sheets to pester David, but as such, also watered the seeds.

    “Step one down; now I just need some lightning…” he murmured to himself. He rose from the mud and looked up at the crackling clouds through the rain. He released Joltik from his Pokéball and began explaining the plan.

    “Alright Joltik, I need your help.” he started to say. “See that mound of dirt over there?” he asked; Joltik turned to look and nodded with his characteristic determination. “I need you to help me strike that spot in particular with electricity. The catch is that it has to be redirected lightning from this storm. Do you think you can do it?” he continued. Joltik truly had no idea whether he could or not, but he wasn’t about to let David know that; bristling with static charge and unable to hold still, he nodded again and jumped in front of David to try. David smiled at his Pokémon’s enthusiasm.

    “Alright, Thundurus! Do your worst, you pussy!” David shouted into the night sky. The clouds crackled angrily in response and seemed to move closer; David knew the Legendary had heard him, but he also knew he couldn’t easily trick a trickster. Thundurus was wary of David’s brazenness and dropped a crack of lightning a safe distance from the pair as a warning.

    “Joltik, now!” David commanded. Joltik focused carefully and moved without hesitation. His command over electricity had always come from within; he could spin his electrically charged silk in the form of Electroweb, but he had never tried to control external electricity like this, even before David had caught him. It came as second nature to the small Electric-type however and, though it was subtle, Thundurus’ electricity bent and diverted from its path just a tiny bit as it landed. The sky seemed almost to growl in response for having been defied.

    “Wow! Alright, Joltik!” David said in congratulations. The precedent was now set that his plan could potentially work; Joltik could divert Thundurus’ electricity to at least some degree, so now all that remained was diverting it to the right spot. Thundurus was obviously angered at having been duped however; he wasn’t about to give Joltik another chance. Without warning, another bolt of lightning shot from the clouds and struck very close to them. David dove for the ground blindly to escape and felt the heat singe his clothes, but Joltik wasn’t so lucky. Though the bolt narrowly missed him, it still charged his wet fur and stung him; he took the blow in stride, shaking it off and jumping back into the fray.

    “Joltik, are you alri-” David started to ask as he rose gingerly, but Joltik acted before he could finish his question. As a return show of strength, Joltik began to bristle and concentrate. Not to be outdone, after a moment of charge, another wicked lightning bolt dropped from the sky. This one wasn’t Thundurus’ doing however; with the downpour of rain to aide him, Joltik had taught himself Thunder.

    “Wow…” David murmured in awe; Joltik was small, but never deterred and a fast learner. Thundurus was angry now; he began dropping bolt after bolt of powerful lightning around Joltik, but none of them hit. Joltik leapt like a blur, hopping from place to place as he nimbly dodged the strikes. Joltik was always filled with pent up energy, it was a characteristic of his species, but David had never seen him quite like this. Joltik diverted each of the streams of power as they drew near, causing them to strike harmlessly around him. Thundurus was growing enraged; high above the clouds, well out of David and Joltik’s sight, the Legendary Kami flung bolt after bolt at his foes with rage burning in his eyes, much to his brother’s annoyance. Joltik had practiced enough, he felt; he dodged a final bolt of lightning and flung himself atop the mound where the Wacan seeds lay. As far as the impatient Joltik was concerned, it was time to piss or get off the pot; Thundurus hesitated as he recognized what Joltik was trying to do, ceasing his bombardment and moving closer to steady his aim. The clouds growled angrily as he prepared for a final strike.

    “Joltik, do you know what you’re doing?” David whispered from beside him. The rain and the winds had stopped; Tornadus had bowed out momentarily. Joltik nodded in determination, never breaking his stern gaze into the clouds. He closed his eyes momentarily, preparing himself for the final movement, and then unexpectedly began to change.

    Joltik had always been strong, but David had just assumed he was a powerful species. In truth, he had been a powerhouse long before David ever met him; doing battle with the Legendary was simply enough to push him over the edge. His small body began to shine in the dark night air, illuminating the clearing. His tiny body melded away into nothing more than a wisp of light; it began to grow much larger in size as the characteristic blue rings associated with evolution started to wrap around him. Several large, muscular legs stretched out from his expanding, bulbous body, and two large feelers grew from his mouth. As he grew in size, the rings started to circle faster; Joltik’s evolution shortly became complete, shrouding the landscape in a momentary wash of light. In his place atop the hill when the process concluded stood the large, imposing form of a Galvantula; Joltik had evolved.

    Though David couldn’t see that far, Galvantula reopened his eyes and utilized his Compoundeyes ability to scan the sky for his foe; though it was faint, he managed to spot Thundurus breaching through the lower portion of the clouds across the valley. Thundurus took aim, careful to not miss or let his foe divert the stream again; growling with contempt, he roared and launched the final bolt. It sailed clean and true towards the newly evolved Galvantula, many miles away. Galvantula traced it with careful focus from his Compoundeyes as it moved; he would only have a split second to react before it reached him. Galvantula let his intuition take over and moved again without thought. Against all of Thundurus’ might to stop him, the stream of lightning bent at a sharp angle just before reaching his foe. Galvantula sprang out of the way on his powerful new array of legs to keep from being struck. He turned in midair and diverted it a second time to strike the seeds behind him. From David’s perspective, one instant Galvantula was waiting atop the mound of dirt where the seeds were planted, and the next a stream of lighting was striking the hill, bending in a perfect A-frame towards the sky. Before he knew it, his Pokémon was standing by his side, breathing heavily but grinning at his success; the clap of thunder followed a second later, echoing through the foothills.

    Thundurus screamed from his post in the clouds; the sky turned an even darker shade of black and began twisting and swirling in anger. In an instant, the downpour and winds started up again, stronger than before and soaking David and Galvantula to the bone. Though the seeds were on their way to growing, Tornadus and Thundurus had not taken kindly to being duped. The pair of brothers went into an irreconcilable bloodlust, having been pushed too far. As they began flying near and preparing to strike, David heard another scream like the one from before break the howling air; this one was not of rage however, but of fear.

    “What was tha-” he started to ponder in confusion, but the answer quickly dawned on him. “Landorus…” he murmured under his breath. “Of course…” he continued with a grin.

    The skies began to clear as the screaming continued. It grew more and more faint as the dark, deathly storm clouds began to dissipate. Though he couldn’t see them, he knew somewhere out in the mountains the tricksters were being given Hell by their older brother. David chuckled at the thought as the starry night sky came into view again and the full moon shone down brightly. The winds and rains had stopped completely and no more thunder cracked; Landorus had put an end to his brothers’ mischief.

    David turned to look at the mammoth spider that stood next to him. Galvantula turned on his many legs and looked back up at his trainer with, for once, a calm stare. His new form was a little frightening; Clay had warned them that Galvantula were large spiders and that they were hunters, but finally seeing one in person removed a bit of the mysticism. The feelers which hung from his fangs seemed unable to stop moving, much like a housecat’s tail; four simple-eyes lined his forehead in-between two standard ones, unblinking and unwavering. The sight was an unnerving one, but he was still the same old Pokémon inside. David moved closer gingerly and stretched out a hand, laying it carefully over Galvantula’s head, careful not to set him off. His fur was surprisingly soft and gave off a small charge of electricity to the touch. David sighed as the initial fear passed; he smiled warmly at his newly evolved Pokémon.

    “Lookin’ good, buddy…” he said under his breath. Galvantula shifted subtly in acknowledgement.

    In his distraction, David hadn’t realized that the Wacan berry bush had started to change as well. As if by magic, the plant had not only sprouted, but was already growing to a considerable size. Several fledgling berries hung from its vines and were growing larger by the second; clearly it was Landorus’ doing as a token of apology for his brothers’ mess. David smiled and moved up the hill towards it.

    “Come on, Galvantula; let’s get these to Bianca.” he said. His Pokémon nodded in reply and the pair set off back up the road towards the cabin. The small gesture of inclusivity meant a great deal to Galvantula; David was accepting of the sight of his new form, which was not something many people would have been. Galvantula felt a great sense of relief.

    “Hold on, Bianca… we’re coming…” David thought to himself in determination.

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    Cheren sat by the window of the cabin, looking out at the road for any sign of David’s return. Muriel and Eustace sat in their chairs next to the television in worried reflection and thought. Paula diligently continued to apply her Heal Pulse to Bianca as she shivered in the bed, still deep in her trance. Cheren rose from his perch and began to pace about the room.

    “Storm’s stopped…” he murmured. “Do you think he did it?” he continued. His elderly hosts looked down and sighed.

    “It's possible…” Muriel said softly.

    “…although it might just be that Landorus has finally shown up.” Eustace continued for her. Cheren frowned and looked away as he continued to pace.

    “Come on, man… come on…” Cheren muttered. Without prompt, a grin slowly began spreading across Paula’s face; she ceased her Heal Pulse and rose from Bianca’s side.

    “Mr. Cheren, please get the door. That will be Master David any second now.” she said politely to the group. Cheren turned to look at her in surprise.

    “What? He’s coming back? How do you know? I don’t hear any-” he started to say, but a noise cut him short. A dull, tired banging came from the door and made everyone but Paula jump.

    “As I was saying…” Paula murmured sarcastically. Cheren stood frozen for a moment, temporarily forgetting what he was supposed to do. Paula cleared her throat.

    “Mr. Cheren? The door, if you please?” she said again with a giggle. Cheren shook his head and snapped back into focus. He ran towards the door and opened it with a jerky motion; David and Galvantula stood in the doorway, frozen to the bone and very damp.

    “David!” Cheren shouted in shock. “Holy crap, did you get them? Are you okay? What happened?!” he continued to ask. David gingerly held up his fist and palmed a handful of berries into Cheren’s hand.

    “I t-t-t-told you I’d d-d-d-do it…” he said, shivering with the cold.

    The shock of seeing David return had taken longer to pass for Eustace and Muriel than it had for Cheren. As they realized David had returned with the berries, they sprang from their seats with a surprising degree of spryness.

    “Oh Heavens, Eustace, the boy’s actually done it!” Muriel screamed. “Quick, help warm him up! Cheren, give the berries to me!” she continued. Eustace walked quickly to help David and Galvantula into the house; the massive spider made him a tad uneasy, but he went to fetch towels and dry clothing for the pair. Cheren handed Muriel the plump, freshly grown Wacan berries as she ran towards the kitchen; she opened the cabinet in a hurry and pulled out a handful of other berries. She began dropping them into a cup.

    “Alright, remember the poem, Muriel, remember the poem…” she murmured in a stupor. “A Ganlon for her immune system, a Chople for her heart; a Babiri for good old time’s sake and a Lum for some good luck.” she continued. As she listed each berry, she dropped one into the cup to form the mixture. With the first four ready, she took the largest, most plump looking of the Wacan berries and dropped it in along with the others. She began mixing the concoction up into a paste as David and Galvantula dried off in the corner.

    “So… Joltik evolved, huh?” Cheren asked skeptically. David nodded silently as he dried his hair. Galvantula turned his head towards Cheren and looked him over with his many, highly-trained eyes; Cheren shifted away uncomfortably in response.

    “Alright, that should do it!” Muriel said frantically from the kitchen. She hurried towards the bed and cupped Bianca’s head under her arm, gently pouring the mixture down her throat and tilting her head to help her swallow. Nothing seemed to change about Bianca’s condition however; no one made a sound.

    “What now, Muriel?” David asked softly after a moment of waiting. Muriel rose and wiped her hands on her apron.

    “Now we wait, David.” she murmured in response. “Now we wait…”

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    The morning sun was already a sizable distance into the clear skies. It shone down on the shimmering forest as the rays of light hit the dew from the night before. Deerling and Zebstrika ventured from their homes as the morning came, having weathered the fearsome storm of the night. The whole mountainous pass seemed to come alive, venturing forth to greet the new day. Sunbeams shone in through the water-stained windows of the cabin as well and played across Bianca’s sleeping face; it stirred her from her peaceful slumber as she gently fluttered open her eyes. She yawned and stretched as she wiped the sleep from her eyes. A peaceful smile spread across her face as her vision cleared; that smile was quickly replaced with a look of terror as she recognized the creature that hung from the ceiling above her though.

    EEEEEEEEEEKKKK!!!” she shrieked. “OH MY GOD, WHAT IS THAT THING?!?” she continued. Her screaming awoke the whole cabin in an instant; they all stirred from their sleep jarringly as Bianca flailed in panic. Recognizing her fear, Galvantula began scuttling along the ceiling from his perch above her back down to the floor.

    “Bianca! Bianca, relax!” David said, rising from her side and trying to calm her. He had spent the night on the floor next to her, resting his head on her lap. “Joltik evolved, it’s fine! It’s just Joltik!” he continued. He had to physically hold her down to keep her from screaming; she breathed heavily as her senses returned to her, staring over David’s shoulder as Galvantula walked down the wall back to the floor.

    That’s your Joltik?!” she asked in shock after a moment’s pause to examine him. “That’s what a Galvantula looks like? How did this happen? Why did he evolve? How did… um…” she started to say, but she trailed off as she queried her memory of the previous night. “Um… uh, actually… how did I get here? What even happened last night? I can’t remember anything…” she continued. “I remember the storm… and the soup… and the story about Tornadus and Thundurus… and sneezing a lot… but then… nothing. What happened?” she asked. David grimaced as he recalled the night’s events after that point.

    “You got sick from accidentally drinking the rain water and David saved-” Cheren started to say very rapidly, but David shot him a piercing glare to silence him.

    “I got sick? What?” Bianca asked in confusion; David turned back towards her and shook his head quickly.

    “No no, nothing like that; you’re fine. You started feeling really sleepy all of a sudden and you went to bed before the rest of us, that’s all.” he lied, trying to not worry her. “Right, Cheren?” he asked with a growl. Cheren nodded, but Bianca seemed unconvinced.

    “How did Joltik evolve then?” she continued to question him.

    “Oh uh… the rain let up after a while and we went out to do some training. I guess he was just close to evolving; sorry, I know I said I’d keep him a Joltik for a while.” David replied. Bianca raised her eyebrow at him, but didn’t question his story further.

    “So… that’s what Galvantula look like, huh?” she asked, staring nervously at the massive spider. Galvantula stood very still, eyeing her back and trying to keep her from screaming again; he had toned down and become much calmer than when he was a Joltik as a result of evolving. His feelers continued to twitch without rest however; Bianca shifted uncomfortably beneath the covers. “They’re uh… they’re not as bad as Clay described, I guess…” she murmured uneasily.

    “You want to pet him?” David asked through a grin. “His fur is really soft, actually. It bristles when you touch it.” he continued, motioning for Galvantula to come closer. The spider began scuttling over slowly, but Bianca scooted back and pulled the covers up over her bosom.

    “Uh, no no, that’s fine, I’m good. Just stay over there, please.” she said timidly. David chuckled and waved Galvantula down.

    “I was a little afraid of him at first too, but you get used to it.” he said, walking over and laying a hand on Galvantula’s back. Galvantula purred like a cat at his trainer’s touch.

    “Yeah… yeah, I’m sure I will…” Bianca said, both trying to reassure David and herself. Paula, Muriel and Eustace had fully awoken now as well. Paula shot David a sly look and began walking towards the pair with her characteristic, seductive strut; David knew something bad was coming.

    “Paula, what are you-” he started to ask telepathically, but Paula raised her hand to her lips to silence him. She turned towards Bianca and looked her straight in the eye.

    “I did?” Bianca asked after a moment. “…I did?!” she continued in surprise. After another pause, she spoke up again quietly. “…he did?” she said, looking down in embarrassment. A small grin began to spread across her face. She looked up at David and stared right in his eyes; her gaze felt extraordinarily piercing

    “Goddamn it, Paula, why did you do that?” he started to say telepathically, but she just smiled at him again wryly and giggled.

    “You are modest to prefer not alarming her over showcasing your own bravery, master, but if someone else takes it upon themselves to mention it to her, it reflects nothing upon your own integrity personally.” she replied in a bouncing tone. David sighed, but quickly caught his breath as Bianca leaned in closer towards him.

    “Did he now, Paula? Against a Legendary? My my…” she said in a mock seductive voice. David swallowed nervously.

    “I… uh…” David stammered. “I didn’t want to concern you; we took care of it.” he continued. Bianca giggled femininely under her breath. Without a moment’s hesitation, she sat up on her knees from under the covers and kissed him softly.

    “Thank you, love; on both accounts.” she whispered. David grinned.

    “You can thank me later, master…” Paula mused softly.

    With Bianca’s condition fully healed and the storm having passed thanks to Landorus’ intervention, the group rose and prepared to continue their journey. They thanked Eustace and Muriel for their hospitality and left the small cottage behind them, continuing their trek onward through the mountains. In the calm after the storm, the whole pass seemed more alive than it had the day before; a sharp contrast to the bitter, chilling sense of decay as winter began to set upon them. Before them to the north, Twist Mountain loomed overhead as their final obstacle before Icirrus City. A snowstorm was beginning to blanket the mountain; it would be no easy task to pass through it…

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    Really? You went there? I like Snubbull for the role, and they'ere much better characters than CN gave them credit for, and it's a really nice fit for the Tricksters, but did you really have to bring up a painful cartoon like that?

    There'll be more to this post later I hope. I'm working on recoviering a bunch of stuff I wrote, so my apologies this is brief
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    Okay I LOVE GALVANTULA! Now that that's out of the way I liked this chapter simply because of all the intense electrifying happenings. I mean redirecting lightning from a thunderous That is just awesome. Best part is it was storming outside when I read it and it gave the perfect reading atmosphere!
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    I'm not even done this chapter and I just got to the courage the cowardly dog part and oh my freaking god I'm so happy you put that in there you have no idea. K I'm going to finish the chapter now. LOVE YOU<3 Hahaha.
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    Alright, this chapter was a lot shorter than the rest, but the whole Galvantula was very good, and touching in a way. I hope Bianca can come to accept it's form. The idea of a pokemon that is usually feared and considered ugly, and having David accept it was very nice. Oh and I was just curious, what else do you have in store for us once the initial black/white game story is done, I know you said that the characters would participate in the elite four a second time, but will there be anything after that? Perhaps a journey to a new region? Anyways, great chapter CB!
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    Hey! Currently on my way to the gym, just thought you should know that I did the whole text thing again, so I can listen to the chapter on my iTouch while running. hahah. Space reserved so that i can just edit in later that I'm about to read this, although i did read the Author's Note.

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    btw: The length of the chapter in the whole Spoken Word thing is 54:48. haha

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    COME ON Paula, did you really have to ruin it? You really made Cheren seem like an arrogant jerk in this chapter, although he didn't seem this bad in the games. I really like how you wrote the relationship between the three legendaries, it reminded me of a story that I read on Smogon once. Oh yeah, here it is: A Pokemon Parable. I think you wrote in the evolution at the right time, although you might wait a little while before anything else evolves. Although Munchlax seems a bit overdue for an evolution now. By the way, love the Courage the Cowardly Dog, reference. My parents banned me from watching that show when I was a kid because they thought it was stupid and scary.
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    Over 9000 internets for the CTCD reference.

    Anyways, despite the length you got Joltik's evolution well written. I also like how you portray the Weather trio, fits 'em rather well.
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    Epic. Best fanfic ever. I'll edit later. And tell Cheren to stop being a dick!
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    Hey everyone; new chapter soon, just wanted to respond to some comments.

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    Really? You went there? I like Snubbull for the role, and they'ere much better characters than CN gave them credit for, and it's a really nice fit for the Tricksters, but did you really have to bring up a painful cartoon like that?
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    They can't all be 2+ parts. It is still nearly 50,000 characters and 16+ pages which, no offense to anyone else out there, is a fair shine more than most stories.

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    but the whole Galvantula was very good, and touching in a way. I hope Bianca can come to accept it's form. The idea of a pokemon that is usually feared and considered ugly, and having David accept it was very nice.
    Expect to see more of this as time goes on. Bianca and Galvantula aren't done together yet.

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    Oh and I was just curious, what else do you have in store for us once the initial black/white game story is done, I know you said that the characters would participate in the elite four a second time, but will there be anything after that? Perhaps a journey to a new region? Anyways, great chapter CB!
    In the actual games, you battle the Elite Four once, deal with N, and then the credits roll. At that point, you are given the ability to go past Opelucid City/Nimbasa City to the east and explore that portion of the region. When you're done, you battle the E4 again, battle Alder, and then the game is truly "over." Part one is titled "Main Game," part two is "Post-Game," and that's all you're getting out of me for right now.

    Also, no offense to anyone who has said this in the past (because you didn't know), but please don't call me "CB." Personal pet peeve; the biggest asshole I ever knew was named that. Like... not just an asshole, but like... sadistic and cruel. I just don't like being reminded of him.

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    And tell Cheren to stop being a dick!
    Why did you think Cheren was so bad in this chapter? He wasn't supposed to be, and I don't personally see it. Cheren was just supposed to be... Cheren, in this one; he was there, but he wasn't really anything one way or the other. I dunno how to phrase it...

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    Edit: I forgot to mention this in the last AC's, but after writing the last chapter, I felt compelled to go catch a female Pikachu and nickname it "Biancachu."

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    Edit: I forgot to mention this in the last AC's, but after writing the last chapter, I felt compelled to go catch a female Pikachu and nickname it "Biancachu."
    Hahah! That would be perfect!

    Anyways late review.... Heheh, yeah. Sorry about that. I started my review last night, but then my friend (David on the podcast) logged on and I remembered that we had to get his team ready for Regionals (and then he decided he's not going for the Autumn one, he'll just go during Spring).

    So yeah, sorry. Might as well just post a new comment so that you know I posted. ^__^

    Anyways, here's the review! First of all, while this may not be your favorite chapter, it's actually one of my favorites. The whole plot of the story was so good, and the execution of things were perfect. Dialogue, description, backstory, even the reference to Courage was awesome (I wish Courage had played a bigger role, but he definitely fit the part. haha). So, for my more traditional, yet, probably difficult to read, style of reviewing, I number.

    1. Galvantula's evolution was a great addition to the chapter. Yes, Joltik was recently caught, but his evolution only added to the chapter. And your reasoning for it was also very sound, so there really isn't a problem with it. I actually liked it. Oh, and once again, very good job with giving Gal a personality. I like his personality, actually. And Bianca's reaction to him was priceless. At least I found it really funny. ^_^

    2. Whole scene with Thundurus and Tornadus v. David and Joltik/Galvantula? Very nice. I really don't see why you didn't like this chapter more. All the effects were slightly cliche, but not in a "Oh, I've seen this before, boring!" kind of way, but in a "It's obvious what happens, but it's so interesting the way he puts describes it and allows things to unfold" kind of way. If that makes sense.

    First of all, the weather that played into effect was so climactic, and added to the visuals that readers may get while reading. It was a lot like the scene where Ash and Pikachu were cycling to get to the Pokemon Center and Pikachu Thunderbolted all the Spearow. And then the personalities that you gave each of the Kamis was really nice. The two Pranksers (haha) and the older brother. And the little game that took place between David and Gal and Thundurus. That was really cool.

    Basically, I like this scene a lot.

    3. This chapter is just another testimony to your creativeness. You are given a premise from the canon game/storyline. And you work your own little magic into it, allowing it to be both original and not too out there. Despite this being one of your shortest chapters, I feel it's one of your best.

    4. Expanding on my earlier comment on your referencing CtCD, that was very. Cool. For lack of brain power to fuel better word choice. I really like how you were able to do that, and how even though it wasn't major, you still took the time to try and incorporate that in. It wasn't choppy either; they were very believable characters. Although, I must say that Eustace (after his initial reaction to the Kamis) was a bit quiet, while Courage wasn't very cowardly. Which wasn't bad, I was just excited to see what you'd do with the Cowardly Dog part of the reference. But it's really nothing that takes away from the chapter. haha

    5. You called them 'Kamis' instead of 'Genies.' Very good of you. hahha

    6. The cute little scene in the end was very. Well, cute. haha. I liked it a lot, mainly because I'm a sucker for lovers. Although, I must say, it's a little awkward for that whole scene to happen while everyone's just looking on on them. @__@ But besides that, it was nice. I like how it played out as well. Silly Paula.

    Overall, again, one of my favorite chapters from you. There's not really anything to say bad about this chapter. I think there was a typo somewhere but it wasn't bad enough that I couldn't understand (technically, nothing that Alex the Mac couldn't understand). Great job, and I can't wait for the next one!

    *skips over to the OP to check the title of the next chapter*

    P.S. I get internets for understanding the Courage reference? SO COOL! I've always wanted interenets!
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    add me on pm list please. Your story is one of the best i have read. Only the Verger saga (3 stories) by blue bongo at fanfiction.net can spare with you. Keep up the good work.
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    “It’s too bad we never had to use it before now…” Bianca chimed up, frowning. “The weather has always been so nice when we’ve had to camp out that we’ve never needed it; do you boys still even remember how to set it up?” she continued. Cheren raised his eyebrow and turned to look at her as they walked.

    “‘You boys?’” he asked. “You have to help us too you know, Bianca.” he continued. “I have no qualms with kicking you out in the rain if you don’t help us…” he said with a small laugh sarcastically, but David took it literally and shot him an angry glare.

    “I do.” he said sharply. “You’d make a lady do manual labor out in the middle of the mountains in late autumn with a storm coming in, and then kick her out in the rain if she didn’t sufficiently enough? How chivalrous of you…” he continued. Bianca smiled and subtly brushed her hand up against David’s at his comment; David smiled back briefly, but Cheren interrupted, oblivious to their gestures.

    “You’ve been letting Paula get to you with all her ‘Victorian etiquette’ bullshit now that she’s a Gardevoir, haven’t you?” he asked. “Pardon my pragmatism, but I think those conditions exemplify exactly the kind of situation where it’d be all-hands-on-deck. ‘Chivalry’ has no place out here.” he continued. “Ever since you two became an item, you’ve been getting more and more soft, David. Bianca used to do guy stuff with us when we were kids in Nuvema Town, remember? What’s next, you gonna start reading Cosmopolitan Clefairy and Vespiquen Vogue too?” he asked mockingly. David stared at him vacantly.

    “Uh… yeah, Bianca used to do guy stuff with us as kids in Nuvema Town, Cheren, but the key words there are ‘as kids.’” he said carefully. “We used to sneak up behind you and yank your little Togepi tighty-whiteys up over your head when you weren’t looking back then too, but we grew up, Cheren; we’re 18-years-old now and adults. You and I aren’t little kids anymore and Bianca’s a grown woman. I guess if you want to still be a kid though, that’s fine; what do you say, Bianca? Want to go for an old grab-and-yank for old time’s sake?” he asked fiendishly. Bianca laughed in a deep tone but Cheren moved away nervously out of habit. David laughed too at his friend’s residual fear.

    “Goddamn it, you assholes, don’t!” Cheren said, quickly stepping out of their reach and putting his hands over his butt. “Fine, Bianca can sit on her fat *** and eat bonbons while we fight with that stupid tent if it’ll make you feel like a big man; just don’t screw with my underwear…” he continued timidly. There was a kind of whine to his voice that made David and Bianca both crack up laughing.

    “Well I think it’s very sweet of David, Cheren.” Bianca mused softly as they finished laughing. “It’s not about ‘gender roles’ or ‘division of work,’ it’s called ‘being polite to girls,’ and I appreciate it.” she continued. Cheren rolled his eyes and relaxed his stance.

    “Of course you do; you’re not the one who’s going to have to fight with that tent…” he muttered, but they didn’t hear him.
    This proves that Cheren is a dick. :P I personally saw him as a dick here. Half of this doesn't seem like Cheren is joking...

    “What?!” she shouted. “What did you- WHOOOA!” she screamed. She stepped right into the mud and felt her foot slide out from under her. She slipped and fell face-first into the damp soil, covering her whole body in it. She coughed and choked as she rose, spitting a little bit of mud out of her mouth. Cheren kept running, pretending to be unaware of her fall, but David stopped and doubled back to help her; he grabbed her hand and pulled her up, helping her run the rest of the way to the cabin. Upon reaching the awning over the porch, the group stopped to catch their breath.
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    “My name is Bian-ca-CHOO!”
    Yes, yes it is!!!

    “David, I know you care a lot about Bianca and so do I, but it’s a pretty big logical jump from ‘she shouldn’t have to help us set up the tent because she’s a girl’ to ‘I’m going to go screw with a pair of spiteful Legendaries to try and save her life.’ Weigh the risks, man; is being the big macho ‘protector/provider’ role worth getting yourself killed too?” he asked. David considered his words, but approached Muriel slowly after a moment of silence. He knelt down to her height in the chair and took a hold of her hands to calm her.
    WHOA, CHEATING ON BIANCA, EH?!?!?

    JK

    “Joltik, are you alri-” David started to ask as he rose gingerly, but Joltik acted before he could finish his question. As a return show of strength, Joltik began to bristle and concentrate. Not to be outdone, after a moment of charge, another wicked lightning bolt dropped from the sky. This one wasn’t Thundurus’ doing however; with the downpour of rain to aide him, Joltik had taught himself Thunder.
    Joltik can't learn thunder... I would have made him learn it as a gavantula if I was writing this.

    Joltik had always been strong, but David had just assumed he was a powerful species. In truth, he had been a powerhouse long before David ever met him; doing battle with the Legendary was simply enough to push him over the edge. His small body began to shine in the dark night air, illuminating the clearing. His tiny body melded away into nothing more than a wisp of light; it began to grow much larger in size as the characteristic blue rings associated with evolution started to wrap around him. Several large, muscular legs stretched out from his expanding, bulbous body, and two large feelers grew from his mouth. As he grew in size, the rings started to circle faster; Joltik’s evolution shortly became complete, shrouding the landscape in a momentary wash of light. In his place atop the hill when the process concluded stood the large, imposing form of a Galvantula; Joltik had evolved.

    Though David couldn’t see that far, Galvantula reopened his eyes and utilized his Compoundeyes ability to scan the sky for his foe; though it was faint, he managed to spot Thundurus breaching through the lower portion of the clouds across the valley. Thundurus took aim, careful to not miss or let his foe divert the stream again; growling with contempt, he roared and launched the final bolt. It sailed clean and true towards the newly evolved Galvantula, many miles away. Galvantula traced it with careful focus from his Compoundeyes as it moved; he would only have a split second to react before it reached him. Galvantula let his intuition take over and moved again without thought. Against all of Thundurus’ might to stop him, the stream of lightning bent at a sharp angle just before reaching his foe. Galvantula sprang out of the way on his powerful new array of legs to keep from being struck. He turned in midair and diverted it a second time to strike the seeds behind him. From David’s perspective, one instant Galvantula was waiting atop the mound of dirt where the seeds were planted, and the next a stream of lighting was striking the hill, bending in a perfect A-frame towards the sky. Before he knew it, his Pokémon was standing by his side, breathing heavily but grinning at his success; the clap of thunder followed a second later, echoing through the foothills.
    THIS. IS EPIC! But, isn't it early for joltik to evolve, catching it at lv. 23 or whatever in chargestone cave?


    “I did?” Bianca asked after a moment. “…I did?!” she continued in surprise. After another pause, she spoke up again quietly. “…he did?” she said, looking down in embarrassment. A small grin began to spread across her face. She looked up at David and stared right in his eyes; her gaze felt extraordinarily piercing

    “Goddamn it, Paula, why did you do that?” he started to say telepathically, but she just smiled at him again wryly and giggled.
    And YOU said Paula wasn't a troll...

    JK


    Great chapter overall, but it seems a bit short (most are 2 pages, but w/e quality of writing still looks great) The only big slop I can see is Joltik learning thunder.
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    Thanks, and I agree, but "lampshades?" I don't think I know that phrase.
    It's a TV Tropes term. It means "pointing out something exists in the story, regardless of logic"

    I didn't really see Cheren as that big of a jerk; at least enough to get notable. He always is...

    I agree with Dr. Chaos, Munchlax should be evolving soon. It may be because David hasn't used him much, but traveling from the Pinwheel Forest to almost Twist Mountain, with some additional detours, should make him pretty happy. Or maybe you're going to make the happiness be actual happiness, not in-game styled. It's most likely you spacing out evolutions, which is understandable.

    Outstanding chapter as always. Even though it is "short" it's longer than the average fan-fic writer's average chapter. I didn't find it short. I must ask out of curiosity, is this the last we'll be seeing of the trio?
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    Quote Originally Posted by mudkips View Post
    This proves that Cheren is a dick. :P I personally saw him as a dick here. Half of this doesn't seem like Cheren is joking...
    No offense, but I assume based on this that you have, shall we say, "limited" experience with teenage boys. That's just how we act towards each other. They say "write about what you know," so I am (hence why this is just a retelling of BW, lol).

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    Joltik can't learn thunder... I would have made him learn it as a gavantula if I was writing this.
    Galvantula can't either, lol. Thundurus "taught" him, we'll say.

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    THIS. IS EPIC! But, isn't it early for joltik to evolve, catching it at lv. 23 or whatever in chargestone cave?
    Joltik in Chargestone Cave are found between levels 24 and 27 according to PokeEarth. As I said before, they evolve starting at Level 36. Given that they are going to be fighting Brycen soon, that puts everyone around the mid-to-high thirties, which means this was canonically approximately the right time for him to evolve. As I already explained though, if I didn't do it here, I wouldn't have had another opportunity until Opelucid, which would be far too late. I figured too early but numerically correct was better than too late.

    Quote Originally Posted by Hilijix View Post
    I agree with Dr. Chaos, Munchlax should be evolving soon. It may be because David hasn't used him much, but traveling from the Pinwheel Forest to almost Twist Mountain, with some additional detours, should make him pretty happy. Or maybe you're going to make the happiness be actual happiness, not in-game styled. It's most likely you spacing out evolutions, which is understandable.
    The next Gym uses Ice-types, and Munchlax's main move is Fire Punch, plus his ability is Thick Fat; I'll let you guys draw your own assumptions from that.

    (p.s. I think I actually stated a long time ago that he'd evolve around Icirrus )

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    The best fanfic that I have ever read. Just one drawback:Your sig is a huge spoiler.
    Pokemon X and Y. That sets the tune for the next 13 games.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Chalant View Post
    The best fanfic that I have ever read. Just one drawback:Your sig is a huge spoiler.
    Hahaha, yeah, pretty much. But honestly, everyone has all their Pokemon already. It's not too much of a giveaway. Of course they're going to evolve all their Pokemon.

    But at the time CB put that in his sig, I think Bianca and David were both still lacking one Pokemon. But that's all fixed now. ^_^

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    Quote Originally Posted by NACHOE! View Post
    Hahaha, yeah, pretty much. But honestly, everyone has all their Pokemon already. It's not too much of a giveaway. Of course they're going to evolve all their Pokemon.

    But at the time CB put that in his sig, I think Bianca and David were both still lacking one Pokemon. But that's all fixed now. ^_^
    I saw the sig when the first chapter ended, so i got kinda disappointed.
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    No offense, but I assume based on this that you have, shall we say, "limited" experience with teenage boys. That's just how we act towards each other. They say "write about what you know," so I am (hence why this is just a retelling of BW, lol).
    I thought they were around age te- Oh, yeah, nvm, their 18 in this story LOL
    *Facepalm*
    Edit: I was just playing B/W and it says I'm 80 something pounds, and well, umm yeah

    Gavantula can't either, lol. Thundurus "taught" him, we'll say.
    Yeah, it can learn thunder. Check smogon. That's the ONLY reason to use him.

    Joltik in Chargestone Cave are found between levels 24 and 27 according to PokeEarth. As I said before, they evolve starting at Level 36. Given that they are going to be fighting Brycen soon, that puts everyone around the mid-to-high thirties, which means this was canonically approximately the right time for him to evolve. As I already explained though, if I didn't do it here, I wouldn't have had another opportunity until Opelucid, which would be far too late. I figured too early but numerically correct was better than too late.
    Well okay than. I see your logic.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Chalant View Post
    I saw the sig when the first chapter ended, so i got kinda disappointed.
    Ahhhh, I see. Well, the storyline behind each of them are generally very interesting, so he's really just spoiling what Pokemon they each get. You'll still enjoy how everything goes down. ^__^

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    Quote Originally Posted by mudkips View Post
    Yeah, it can learn thunder. Check smogon. That's the ONLY reason to use him.
    Yeah, Compoundeyes + Thunder for 91% accuracy; why do you think I mentioned Compoundeyes in the same breath during the scene against Thundurus? I meant that neither can learn it via level-up; they both get it, but via TM.

    And it isn't the only reason; 108 Speed and useful STABs are nice too.

    EDIT:
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    Ahhhh, I see. Well, the storyline behind each of them are generally very interesting, so he's really just spoiling what Pokemon they each get. You'll still enjoy how everything goes down. ^__^
    You shouldn't look at this and think "Aww, now I know Megan Fox is in this, ergo the plot is spoiled for me," you should go "Hey, Megan Fox! Now I can look at explosions and boobs for two hours!"
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    Quote Originally Posted by ChaosBlizzard View Post
    Yeah, Compoundeyes + Thunder for 91% accuracy; why do you think I mentioned Compoundeyes in the same breath during the scene against Thundurus? I meant that neither can learn it via level-up; they both get it, but via TM.

    And it isn't the only reason; 108 Speed and useful STABs are nice too.
    Oops! Actually, joltik can't learn thunder in any way, but gavantula can, is what I'm trying to say No, I'm serious, joltik can't learn thunder at all! Also, because it's in the rain, wouldn't compound eyes be irrelevant?

    And @ 108 speed and useful STAB's-Gavantula's relatively low attacking stats and awful movepool, not to mention SR weakness outweighs the benefits that you stated. Usually.

    Edit: LOL @ second part of your post
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    Quote Originally Posted by ChaosBlizzard;13723100

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    You shouldn't look at [url=http://mrmarkrobson.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2008/08/2773892061_b33f065d1a.jpg
    this[/url] and think "Aww, now I know Megan Fox is in this, ergo the plot is spoiled for me," you should go "Hey, Megan Fox! Now I can look at explosions and boobs for two hours!"
    Hahaha! Well, there we go. I gave the explanation, he gave the example. hahah

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    Quote Originally Posted by ChaosBlizzard View Post

    You shouldn't look at this and think "Aww, now I know Megan Fox is in this, ergo the plot is spoiled for me," you should go "Hey, Megan Fox! Now I can look at explosions and boobs for two hours!"
    1) Depite being a Transfan, I've never seen that poster, though I knew that's what you were going for before I even hit the link. And thank you, for using the sequel and not the original (best as far as plot, but lacking much thereof) and better of the trio.

    2) reasons to use Galvantula:

    When you tie up a criminal with an Ariados, the criminal squirms a bit until he's free, and/or his accomplice comes along, the accomplice pulls out a knife and says "Here, I'll just cut this webbing and you'll be free."

    When you tie up a criminal with a Galvantula, the criminal suiroms until the 180volts hits him, and/or his accomplice comes along, the accomplice pulls out a knife and says "Here, I'll just cut this web- AIIYYEE!!!!" *Bzzt* "Ow." *Bzzt*
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