Hey everyone! After waiting ever-so-patiently for an extra week, here is the longest chapter to date
"Separation." This chapter comes in at exactly
37 pages in Word, which makes it a full 10 pages longer than the previous longest chapter, "The Legend of Gustavo Riviera." Hope you all like it.
This chapter covers the gang's crossing through Twist Mountain. Two ideas came together to create how I wanted to approach this topic. First of all, Twist Mountain, as you all know, changes dramatically in Winter; there is one path through the mountain that only works in Spring, Summer and Fall, and does not work in Winter, and another that only works in Winter, but not in Spring, Summer or Fall. My idea was for the group to be separated by a rock slide, and have to take both
paths as so to include as much of the game's mechanics as possible. The second idea was to have a chapter that is almost entirely dialog.
I like to think the thing that sets this story apart is the battle scenes, but writing dialog between characters in a believable, flowing, natural way and which actually gets across a point is something that I personally
think I'm both pretty good at (comparatively) and that is a lot of fun. I knew the act of simply walking for two days through the caves wouldn't be interesting, especially if they were split up like they are, so I decided to write this chapter that way. This chapter is meant to be almost entirely dialog to help pass the time; some of it is meaningless, some of it is just me ranting, some of it is stuff I think is important to the story
but not necessarily to the plot,
and some of it is in fact introduction of plot points. Hopefully these ideas came together in an effective way.
As a small aside, this chapter draws at least some
inspiration from two particular episodes from the TV show: "UnBEARable"
from Johto, and "Snow Way Out"
from Kanto. I assume you guys will be able to see the connections. I forgot to mention it, but the previous chapter was also actually heavily based on an episode from the show; "The Stun Spore Detour"
from the Orange Islands (the one where Misty catches her Poliwag) has virtually the same plot, because I drew inspiration for how to approach that chapter from that episode.
Just a few random comments and musings and I'll be on my way...
-I re-wrote the opening paragraph of the second section a number of times because I wasn't sure if I was actually conveying the geometry correctly. Most of us have played the games and therefore know what Twist Mountain looks like, but I write this as if I were telling the story of BW to someone who had never played. Do you guys think I described it accurately? I know I made the pit a lot
deeper than it really is, but that aside, how was it?
-This is kind of how I always imagined Pokeballs might work; when a trainer catches a Pokemon, the Pokemon and the Pokeball are linked
somehow. That's why you can't catch an already caught Pokemon from another trainer, and why you can't use a different Pokeball to hold an already captured Pokemon. The act of releasing a Pokemon
breaks that connection and, for all intents and purposes, makes the Pokemon wild again. At that point, assuming the Pokemon doesn't run away upon being freed, the original trainer could recapture them in a different Pokeball, a new trainer could catch them as if they had always been wild, or they could just go back to the wilderness. As such, when Paula's Pokeball breaks, that link between her and the ball is broken because the electronics are destroyed; David would either have to repair the ball or recapture her, as she had basically become a wild Pokemon. This isn't of any real significance aside from forcing her to be with David through the whole trip outside of her ball, but it is something I've always found interesting to ponder as a thought experiment.
-Please to be ignoring the fact that England and Scotland are not real places in the Pokemon world. *shady look*
-The portion of Bianca’s rant on the nature of love that talks about constants actually has bit of a funny story to it. Specifically, the line “Everything that is alone is not constant” is not something I made up. I was in my CS120 class a week or two ago (C Programming), and we were learning about the keyword “const,” which specifies that the value of a variable is constant
and should never change after it is initialized in the program. My teacher is from Lebanon and speaks English as a second language, so sometimes he strains for the proper grammar and syntax. He was trying to show that all of the variables in the example he was showing us that weren’t prefaced with the letter “C” in their name were not constant variables, but what he ended up literally saying was “everything that is alone is not constant,” with “alone” meaning “not starting with the letter ‘C’.” It had absolutely nothing to do with love or anything like that and I was taking it 100% out of context, but I still thought it was a fairly poignant thing to say. I decided to include it, but I thought you guys might like to know the origin of that line.
-For those of you who don’t get the joke about 4Kids and the rice ball, read this
and this section of this.
-Paula’s speech on why she says “master” and on Gardevoir/Gallade culture is probably my favorite part of this chapter. I think that came out really well. That whole section is good.
-I’m a little worried I went a bit overboard on something, so if any of you would like to confirm or deny, that’d be appreciated. I think I put too much significance on the bit where David asks Paula to say something out loud. As I’ve said before, Paula the Gardevoir gets her name from a real-life friend of mine; she lives in California though and I live in Washington, so we frequently could only communicate via text. Actually getting to hear her voice was kind of rare, and it became sort of a treat after a while; Paula the Gardevoir’s personality is not supposed to be based on Paula the human’s, but some similarities are naturally going to spill over. I think putting so much significance on her saying something out loud is a result of that. Just let me know if you guys thought it was too much or if it fit.
-Cutest moment of all time: Paula hiccupping or Paula getting hit with a snowball. The choice is yours.
-I’m just going to say preemptively that yes,
Beartic do learn Night Slash… as an egg move. *second shady look*
Well, I suppose I've rambled on enough. Here is the longest chapter to date, Chapter 19, "Separation." Thanks for reading, guys.
P.S. I happened across this
while trying to find a video showing Gardevoir's cry from RSE last night. This is one of the most random, stupid, Japanese-y things I have ever seen, but it made me laugh, so I thought I'd link it. If Gardevoir wasn't your favorite Pokemon before seeing that, and she still
isn't after seeing it, you need to gtfo right now. Gardevoir are so cool.
Y U SO WEIRD?!