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    Here it is! The (not-so) long awaited series 2 of Pokemon Impact! For those of you who haven't read the first one yet click on Series 1 link in my sig.

    The rating is PG to PG13

    Episode 1: The request

    Chapter 1:

    A man with silver hair and long purple jacket was walking down a street. He stopped next to a television shop and saw a tall man in black leather clothing on television. The man in black was none other than Black Jack. He was shaking hands with another person half his size, wearing a blue jacket, black gloves and a red hat. That other person’s name was Ash Ketchum. They became Joint Hoenn League champions at that time.

    The man with silver hair smiled in an evil way as he saw Black Jack. “Black Jack…” he said to himself. “He has proven to be very formidable.”

    Six months later, Ash was back in his home region, Kanto, while Black Jack continued travelling around the world.

    Ash and Pikachu were walking towards Cerulean Gym, where Misty, Ash’s girlfriend, had important news for him.

    Six months back after Black Jack and Ash defeated Mane in a high-staked battle, Ash spoke about the battle and confessed his love to Misty.

    She was relieved at that because she also fell in love with him. She was afraid to let him know as she felt that it might ruin their friendship. Sometime later, Ash decided to live at the gym with Misty. His happy mother allowed to him to live, upon agreement that he would sometime visit her to do some cleaning up.

    Ash and Pikachu entered the Cerulean Gym where Misty worked as a successful Gym Leader. Upon entry, they saw Misty, who was wearing a white swimsuit with her hair down. “Hiya, Mist,” he called happily.
    “Pikachupi!” Pikachu cried also being happy.

    But they also noticed a woman dressed in police uniform. “Er… Officer Jenny?”
    “Pika?”

    Jenny turned round upon hearing. “Ah, Mr. Ketchum,” she said. “I need to speak to you privately.”
    “Can Misty listen to this?” Ash asked, knowing that Misty also wanted to know what’s going on.
    “If she must,” Jenny replied.

    They walked Jenny down to the kitchen. They all sat down by the table and had warm drinks, as Jenny was about to explain things to them.

    “Before I start, Mr. Ketchum,” Jenny asked. “Have you heard of a place called the Orre Region?”
    “Yeah,” Ash replied. “But I don’t know much about it.”
    “The Orre region is dusty and rough place to go to. So rough, that the trainers over there would order their pokemon to attack other trainers. Not many trainers from different regions visit there as it is too dangerous.”

    “That’s terrible!” Misty commented.

    “A year ago,” Jenny continued. “A former criminal and former Team Snagem member known as Wes took down the organisation he once belonged to, including Cipher. But recently, this mysterious new organisation called Team Dark came and stole other trainers’ pokemon and other merchandise. Wes has disappeared but there were evidences that he was trying to find the leader of that organisation.”

    “Wes must be a great trainer to take down an organisation like Team Snagem,” Ash said.

    “Wes wasn’t alone, he was often accompanied by a young girl named Rui,” Jenny continued. “She had this strange ability to identify the pokemon who were being mistreated by their trainers. And then, Wes would use this gadget called the Snagem machine to catch other trainers’ pokemon.”

    “Steal the pokemon from their trainers?” Ash asked. “That’s against the rules of pokemon battling isn’t it? Even if the pokemon are being mistreated?”

    “It is,” Jenny answered. “But since there are a lot of bad trainers over there, we decided to let Wes go so he can treat the pokemon with care.”

    Ash looked back at the time when Charmander, before he evolved into Charizard, joined him because his former trainer never cared about him.

    After remembering that event, he went back to the conversation with Jenny. “So, what can I do to help?” he asked.

    “We need you and the selected members of our team to help us find Wes and his accomplice, Rui and help them defeat Team Dark,” Jenny said.

    “But if Wes is good enough to take down Team Snagem, I’m totally sure that he would take down this organisation by himself,” Ash said.

    “I’m afraid not, the entire police force of that region were using their pokemon to take down the leader but his pokemon beaten ours easily and got away with it without a scratch. I get a feeling that Wes wouldn’t be able to beat him alone.”

    Ash looked down on the table. He had reasons to go to the Orre region: a whole new adventure, a whole new challenge, a whole new experience, etc.

    But then again he had this doubt in mind, what if this leader of Team Dark is unbeatable? No, he can’t think that way, this is not the way Ash Ketchum thinks!

    “So, Mr. Ketchum,” she continued. “If you will come with me, you will meet the trainers that are also suitable for this job.”
    “Alright!” Ash said excitedly. “I’ll go!”

    “Pika!” Pikachu cried happily.

    “Great!” Jenny replied. “We can leave for Vermillion City right away and we’ll leave for the Orre Region tomorrow.”

    “Now, wait a minute!” Misty demanded. “If Ash is going, I’m going too!”

    “I’m sorry, ma’am,” Jenny said. “But this mission is highly too dangerous for you to come.”

    “I’ll go,” Ash answered. “But only if I can take Misty with me.”

    Jenny became stunned at what Ash said. Judging by the look on her face, she wasn’t lying when she mentioned that the Orre region was a dangerous place. Then she changed her expression to being calm. “Alright,” she said. “But the safety of your friend will be your responsibility.”

    “Thank you, officer Jenny,” Ash said. “I just need to make a call to some people first.”

    Ash called Prof. Oak on the videophone. “Hi, Prof. Oak,” he said. Prof. Oak was a researcher on pokemon. Since the beginning of Ash’s pokemon journey.

    “Oh! Ash!” Prof. Oak replied in an interested tone. “How are things?”

    “Everything’s fine. Only I have something new to do.”

    “Oh? What is that?” Prof. Oak asked, wanting to know.

    “I’m going on a mission in the Orre Region.”

    Prof. Oak became shocked and startled at Ash’s announcement. “Ash! A mission in the Orre Region!?”

    “Something wrong, Professor?” Ash asked.

    “Of course there is!” the professor said in protest. “The Orre region is a rough place and the trainers over there would often command their pokemon to attack humans!”

    “I know, Officer Jenny told me about it. Why are you so nervous about it?”

    “I’ve been there before, doing some research about the pokemon’s habitats. But the pokemon over there were very rough, so I had to cancel my project. By the way, what’s the mission?”

    Ash explained everything what Officer Jenny told him: The situation happening in the Orre region, the mysterious new criminal organisation Team Dark, the disappearance of Wes and Rui, etc.

    “Team Dark? They sound quite mysterious and dangerous…” Prof. Oak said as he placed his finger on his chin. “But on the other hand, you did become Hoenn and Orange League champion, and you and Black Jack also took down that Team Missile base. By the way, is there a chance that he would be joining you on your mission?”

    “I don’t know, Professor,” Ash replied, wondering what he was up to recently.

    “Well, since you’re to team up with other trainers, then I see no problem letting you go on your new journey.”

    “Thanks, Professor,” Ash said in a determined tone.

    “What pokemon have you got with you?”

    “I got Sceptile, Swellow, Crawdaunt, Torkoal, Snorlax, Meganium and Pikachu.”

    Pikachu leapt on Ash’s shoulder. “Pika!” he squealed happily.

    “Well, you got a fine choice of pokemon there. But if you feel the need to change you’re pokemon, then don’t be afraid to contact me.”

    “Thanks again, Porfessor.”

    “Good luck, Ash.”

    They both hung up the phone. Ash decided to call one of his best friends, Brock. He called him up via videophone. Brock answered the phone.

    “Hey there, Brocko!” Ash said happily.

    Ash and Brock had been best friends for years. During their travels, along with Misty, Brock was always the ‘big brother’ of the group. Usually, when Ash and Misty argue, Brock was always there to calm them down.

    “Hey, Ash,” Brock replied. “What’s up?”

    “A certain someone wants me to go on a mission to the Orre region.”

    “The Orre region? You don’t mean that rough place, do ya?”

    “I do.”

    “Ash, shouldn’t you at least think about this before going to that place on your own?”

    “I won’t be on my own, Brock. Misty is coming. You can come too if you want.”

    “Well, I’m not going to let two of my best friends get in trouble. So I might as well come, maybe I’ll learn a few things over there. Just one question, who is this ‘certain someone’ you’re talking about?”

    Ash rolled his eyes backwards as he let out a small sigh and smiled. “Officer Jenny,” he answered. “And she’s coming too.”

    “I’m definitely there!” Brock said quickly and excitedly. “I’m leaving right away!”

    Ash always knew that pretty girls were Brock’s weak spot, he just can’t say no to them.

    “Hold on, Brock,” Ash said. “You don’t have to leave. Just get yourself ready and another officer will be there to collect you later.”

    Brock tried to calm down. “All right, Ash,” he said. “See when you get there.”

    “See you later, Brock.”

    They both hanged up. “Now my mom,” Ash sighed as he dialled his home number, knowing that it wasn’t going to be easy talking to her about this.

    A woman in a pink-buttoned shirt answered the call. The woman was none other than Delia, Ash’s mother.

    “Hi, mom!” Ash said.

    “Ash!” her mother shouted, scaring her son. “What do you think you’re doing?”

    “Oh, Prof. Oak told you about it, didn’t he?” Ash said in realisation.

    “Yes! If you’re going to that place then I’m going with you!!” Delia demanded.

    “Mom, it’s going to be okay, I’ll be fine. I’ll have friends with me. Besides, I got into bigger troubles than this.”

    Looking at Ash’s assuring eyes, Delia gave up demanding and smiled. “All right, Ash,” she said. “Just remember to brush your teeth every morning and night, don’t eat too much otherwise you’ll get a stomach ache, don’t forget to pack bandages and plasters and…”

    Ash had an anime sweat drop on the back of his head while listening to his mother’s rulings. “Aw…” he thought to himself embarrassingly. Sometime after Delia made a few rules, they both said their goodbyes and hanged up.

    Officer Jenny walked up behind Ash. “Found anyone yet?” she asked.

    “Yep,” Ash said. “Brock will do.”

    “Good, I’ll send out one of my colleagues to collect him right away. I suggest that you pack your things before leaving.”

    Ash headed off to his room and started packing. He looked happily at Pikachu. “Ready, Pikachu?” Ash asked in a determined tone.

    “Pika!” Pikachu cried in a determined tone as he clenched his small paws.
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    Mwahaha, first to review!!! Kay, since I'm approaching this one chapter at a time, I'll point out most of the errors:
    Ash called Prof. Oak on the videophone. “Hi, Prof. Oak,” he said. Prof. Oak was a researcher on pokemon. Since the beginning of Ash’s pokemon journey,
    Unfinished XP
    They both hanged up the phone
    Hung up, I believe, I think hanged can only be used when referring to the noose definition.
    Ash and Brock had been best friends for years. During their travels, along with Misty, Brock was always the ‘big brother’ of the group. Usually, when Ash and Misty argued, Brock was always there to calm them down.
    But yeah, nice start, I'm lookin' forward to seeing how Black Jack comes into the story again and how he gets put on the mission. I just hope it's a challenge for them, tough enemies are the most fun to read about

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    This is great! Now the sequeal of one of the best fics is out. I was going to point out mistakes, but Chibi got the only ones I saw. Also, thats a good lineup you have for Ash. The only thing I can think of is that when you say Ash stays with Misty, does it mean him and his pokemon were completly lazy? I was just woundering so I can clear something up in my head. It seems like he was training since Corphish evolved into Cradunt. Or maybe Corphish had already evolved in the last fic? I don't really know. Also, will this be told in Ashs point of view now pretty much since the other was in Black Jacks?
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    yes oh yeah this is great i have waited and waited and finaly... YES!!!

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    Hey, awesome. I love this story! BTW, will May and Max make an appearance. Please, make them appear, or I'll be upset since they are my favourite characters. I've also read the first part as a non-member, and it's awesome except for the Ash/Misty love thing. Quite good, though.

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    ZOMG itz teh sequel! ^_^

    -ahem- Good start, man! I looking forward to the next chap!'

    BTW, you still have problems with present and past tense. =/

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    Before I start, I just need to inform that big evil no longer exist and I, Brian Powell, have taken over... (actually, I've only changed my name).

    Chibi Pika: Thanks, dude. *Changes the mistakes* Done! And you'll be seeing a lot more action.

    Cs32: The answer to the laziness between Ash and his pokemon is no, they haven't been lazing about, because if he did become lazy think how disappointed Black Jack would be. And the Corphish / Crawdaunt thing, I never mentioned him evolving and such, but let's just say he did. Ash's point of view? I'm not saying anything as of yet, cos it would ruin the story. Thanks for d review.

    Blaziken1234: You must've been counting days since I made that announcment, huh? Hehe.

    Fire Emblem Prodigy (I think I'll call you Firestarter or Twisted Firestarter from now on): This fic isn't high on shippyness. Originally, I never plan to make May and Max appear on this fic, but I never let my fans down, so I'll be working on it.

    DC: I know, Chibi Pika told me about. Thanks.

    The next chapter is tomorrow (A pound says that Blaziken1234 gets totally excited).

    EDIT: Ha! Five stars already! Oh, wait a minute, only one person voted so far. Still cool!
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    Chapter 2

    Ash, Misty, and Officer Jenny immediately headed off to their first destination of their journey, Vermilion City. They stopped at the pokemon center.

    “Is this the place where we meet the team?” Ash asked.

    “That is correct,” Jenny replied.

    They entered the pokemon center. They soon see Brock, accompanied by Officer Jenny’s colleague, holding Nurse Joy’s hands in a gentle manner. It wasn’t a surprise to Ash and Misty that Brock would dash to pretty women straight away just to flirt with them. “Fate must’ve brought me here to you,” Brock said in a dreamy tone. “After I have completed my task with my companions, we can spend the rest of our lives together.”

    The nurse became shocked and confused of what Brock was saying. Suddenly, a hand tugged Brock’s ear, making him whimper in pain and pulling him away from her. “You can spend the rest of your life alone if you don’t quit that,” Misty said with a frown.

    “You may go now, Jonathon,” Jenny said.

    “Yes madam,” her colleague replied, leaving the center.

    “Now, Mr. Ketchum,” Jenny said. “The team should be arriving…”

    Suddenly a sound of a motorcycle came from outside of the pokemon center. “Ah, they’re here now,” she finished.

    A medium built man with a white t-shirt, blue jeans, red jeacket and brown hair walked in. “Well, well,” he said as he looked at Ash. “You must be the famous Ash Ketchum.”

    “Mr. Ketchum,” Officer Jenny said. “Meet detective Stevens. Famous for solving the most trickiest and most difficult cases.”

    ”Pleased to meet you,” Ash said as he and Stevens shook hands.

    “Same here,” Stevens replied.

    “Wait a minute, is that all you have?” Ash asked, realising that there wasn’t much people here.

    “Oh great. What’s there to worry about?” Stevens muttered as he turned his head round and called out his other companions. “Jesse, James, Meowth!” he shouted. “Get in here! Now!”

    “What!?” Ash cried in shock. “Team Rocket?”

    “Correction,” Stevens replied with a smile. “Former Team Rocket.”

    “Oh yeah,” Ash said as he remembered that Team Rocket no longer existed.

    A year ago, a Team Rocket executive named William Mane took over the criminal organisation after he double-crossed on his boss, Giovanni. Giovanni was found by the police and was put in prison. Mane took over the organisation as the new leader of Team Rocket, later to be named Team Missile. It took a while for Jesse, James and Meowth to discover the change of the organisation’s name and was soon kicked out after a long absence. The former Team Rocket trio explained the locations to the Team Missile to the police. But for some reason, the police wasn’t able to find any, thus they put the trio in jail and sentenced them to do community service. But Stevens found some use for them and decided to make the trio his assistants.

    The former Team Rocket trio entered the center, looking down in shame.

    “It’s not fair, sir,” Jesse moaned. “Why do we have to go on this mission with those twerps.”

    “I see that you guys have already met,” Stevens said.

    “Know them?” Ash replied. “They tried to steal Pikachu so many times but they keep on failing.”

    “Pika!” Pikachu cried, not liking the look of that trio.

    “Don’t worry, Ash,” Stevens said. “They know that Team Rocket no longer exists and I’ve made a deal with them that if this mission comes to a successful conclusion, they will go free and get a handsome fortune.”

    “Well,” Ash replied suspiciously. “As long as they don’t double-cross us, it’s okay.”

    After saying that, Misty finished getting Brock to come his senses. They walked over and they were also shocked when they saw the former Team Rocket trio. “What?” Misty cried. “Team Rocket? Weren’t they history?”

    “Let me explain,” Stevens said.

    But before he could, a huge explosion was heard from outside. “Who caused that explosion?” Jenny asked.

    “Let’s find out,” Ash said.

    The team ran out of the pokemon center and saw three men in dark clothing ordering their pokemon, Houndoom, Linoone and Fearow, to cause havoc around the Vermilion City port where the S.S Anne was.

    “We got to stop them!” Ash yelled. “Pikachu, go!”

    Pikachu leapt from Ash’s shoulder and let out a loud scream while shooting out his electric attack. “PikaCHUUUUUUUUU!”

    The attack hit Linoone, knocking it down. The three men turned around and saw the team that was attacking them. One of them had grey spiky hair and serious looking eyes, the second man had long green hair and calm looking eyes, the third one was about six-foot seven and bald.

    “Don’t disturb us!” shouted the man with the spiky hair. “Who do you think you are? Not that we care!”

    “Who are you to cause damage to public locations?” Jenny yelled back in reply. “I’m placing you three under arrest!”

    “I think not, officer!” said the big man with a deep voice “You have no clue who you’re dealing with.”

    He turned his attention to his pokemon. “Houndoom!” he yelled. “Flamethrower attack!”

    A Houndoom jumped and shot out a huge lick of flame at Pikachu who dodged out of the way.

    “Ash can’t do this on his own!” Misty yelled as she took out her pokeball. “Corsola, Go!”

    She tossed her pokeball out and out came Corsola. “Corsola!” she cried.
    “Corsola!” Misty yelled. “Spike Cannon!”

    Corsola glowed vigorously as she shot out multiple spikes out of her horns. But the opposition easily dodged each incoming attack.

    “Houndoom,” shouted the big man. “Counter Spike Cannon with your Flamethrower!”

    Houndoom shot out a lick of flame at the incoming spikes, wiping them out.

    “Now, Linoone!” shouted the green haired man. “Headbutt attack!”

    Linoone leapt at Corsola and headbutted her in the face, causing major damage.

    “This isn’t right!” Brock said. “Corsola is a rock type, which has strong resistance against normal attacks like Headbutt! Unless…”
    “Stop talking!” Stevens complained. “I’m the detective, but now is not the time to investigate pokemon statistics!”

    Stevens picked out a pokeball and tossed it out. “Go! Quicksilver!”

    A tall green insect with large scythes on each foreleg was let loose out of the pokeball. “Scyther Scy!” it cried.
    “Quicksilver,” Stevens yelled. “Double Edge attack!”

    Quicksilver leapt into the air and dived his head directly at Houndoom. The attack connected with Houndoom’s midsection, sending him flying into his trainer.

    “One down!” Stevens said as he then turned to his other cohorts. “Jesse, James, Meowth! Why aren’t you doing anything?”
    “We don’t help twerps,” James said nervously. “You’re not a twerp, oh no, but…”
    “You two either send out your pokemon now, or it’ll be more hours of community service for you!” Stevens threatened.
    “Yes, sir!” Jesse said in a scared tone.

    She tossed out her pokeball and out popped Wobbuffet as he placed his paw on his head in saluting manner. “Wobbuffet!” he cried.

    “Linoone!” yelled the green haired man. “Tackle attack!”

    Linoone leapt forward and aimed his head at Pikachu, but Wobbuffet landed in front of Pikachu. “Wobbuffet!” Jesse cried. “Counter!”

    Wobbuffet summoned up his psychic powers to bounce Linoone back and send him flying. Linoone landed heavily on his trainer thanks to the attack. Pikachu and Wobbuffet celebrated by slapping each other’s paw (Or as people call it, a high-five).

    “Two down!” Stevens yelled. “One to go!”

    “Why don’t you just give up?” Misty yelled. “We knocked out two pokemon and you’re the only trainer standing.”
    “Never!” shouted the grey haired man. “We have orders from our boss to destroy this ship to stop you getting to the Orre region!”
    “Don’t tell them the plan!” shouted the green haired man.
    “So that’s it!” Stevens said. “You boys must be working for Team Dark!”

    His team-mates were more surprised about Stevens’ quick thinking than discovering where their enemies came from. “How did you work out where they come from so quickly?” Jenny asked.

    “A detective’s natural instinct,” Stevens replied.
    “Now let’s finish them off!” Ash yelled.
    “You got that right!” Misty yelled in agreement.

    “Pikachu!”
    “Corsola!”

    They both shouted the same attack together in unison, “Tackle attack!”

    Pikachu and Corsola aimed their attacks on Fearow, who had no clue how to counter two attacks. The attacks connected and Fearow was sent flying back to his trainer. “They’re done now!” Ash shouted. “Pikachu! Thunder attack!”

    Pikachu leapt into the air and was about to unleash his attack, when suddenly…

    “As the posh people would say, allow us!” said a low, croaky voice. “Okay, boys! Dynamic Punch attack!”

    A shadowy figure jumped out of nowhere and tossed out six pokeballs, much to Ash and Pikachu’s surprise. A Tyranitar, a Feraligatr, a Nidoing, a Salamence, a Metagross and a Blaziken came out of their pokeballs and gave their targets, the Team Dark grunts, their devastating attacks and sent them airborne until they were out of sight.

    The man landed on his feet, so did the pokemon. He had black leather clothing, bandanna, beard and sunglasses. “It has been a long time, kids,” he said.

    Ash and the rest of the team recognised the man straight away and gasped in shock, apart from Officer Jenny who knew that this man would come…
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    yay ba ba ba ba baaaa im lovin it cant wait for the next chappie

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    Jack Black is back! This is going to be cool. Also, it was a good idea to have the members of Team Dark have really strong pokemon. I wounder how it would be if they were caght by an Executive?

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    Who rated this a one?!?! >=( Chibi, go find them and--
    Chibi: --; I don't feel like killing anyone today, ask me tomorrow.
    Rar, anyways, only one non-pointless-comma-related-error and that was a backwards quotation mark when Ash met Stevens. Yah ha, Black Jack's back!! I just knew it was his the second he said Dynamic Punch great chappie!!!
    *Goes off and summons all of friends to rate five stars...*

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    ZOMG this rules!!!

    Yaynez Black Jack is back! Can't wait to see Ash saying "ZOMG liek BJ!"! XD

    Overall, great chappie. Can't wait for the next! ^_^

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    Who really whould rate this kind of a fic a one? I'm mad thinking that someone out there didn't read this and just saw your name and gave you a one or something. Well, it reminded me to rate this.
    *goes to the top and rates it a five star.*
    Ha ha! What? It still says 4.43. Go get em Cjibi!
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    Blaziken1234: The new chapter will be here coming tuesday. Bet you're looking at a ticking clock now, huh?

    Cs32: How would you know if this is Black Jack or not? Plus, you don't know half about Team Dark yet.

    Chibi Pika: Oh, so that's a give away. You've seemed to notice that Black Jack likes to use physical attacks a lot.

    Dark Charizard: Thanx, DC.

    Cs32 (again): I have no clue who gave this a one, maybe it's an advanceshipper (Not Dark Charizard) or a guy who I flamed at for making a poor quality fanfic or it could be someone who doesn't take ratings seriously or...

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    Your welcome and I guess thats all that matters, the reviewers. I mean mines not as good as a lot of peoples. Though i'm happy with the reviews I get.
    *coughChibicough*
    I know that it's Jack Black because of the pokemon you mentioned and the physical attacks.

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    I made it to the sequel! YAY!

    Anyway, so far the plot seems interesting. I'm glad Black Jack got there, the story just wouldn't be the same without him. ^^ Well, that's all I have to say.

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    Cs32: Thumb's up, mate.

    Crystal_Milotic: Believe me, CM, you'll see what Black Jack and the others have in store for Team Dark... *    Spoiler:
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    Everyone else: Yep! I think that this chapter is gonna suck a little bit *Shrugs*

    Chapter 3

    “It can’t be!” Ash said in a surprised tone. “Black Jack?”
    “Ketchum,” Black Jack replied back, as he turned round and showing a small smile.
    “How’s everyone?” Ash asked, also showing a small smile.

    “Well…” Black Jack started as he gently stroked his beard. “Alice recently got a Teddiursa and Eevee as pets, John and Sandra have got a lot of jobs to do and Cassandra and Wally have also been busy, but they have been visiting each other on weekends so that their Gardevoirs can spend time together.”

    “I hope things go well with those two,” Ash replied.

    “Sorry, we’re late,” said a familiar girl’s voice.

    Ash and the others turned to the voice’s attention and saw two familiar figures. One was just a few inches shorter than Ash, she had brown hair with both of her ears covered, she was also wearing a red jacket, a white mini skirt, black and white gloves, black tight shorts, and a red bandanna wrapped around her head. The other figure was shorter than the girl, he had black hair, he was also wearing a pair of glasses, a green shirt, brown short and blue trainers.

    “May? Max?” Ash said in a surprised tone, while putting a happy face. “What are you guys doing here?”
    “We heard that some pokemon contests are going to open around here soon,” May replied. “Then we bumped into Black Jack while he was taking a break from his travelling and he said that he was going on a new adventure. So, how about if we join?”

    Ash turned to Jenny. Knowing what he was going to ask, she gave a small smile and nodded. “Ash and Black Jack have a lot of good friends backing them up,” she thought.

    While they were talking, Black Jack’s attention then turned to Pikachu and smiled in a welcoming fashion. “How are things, you little critter?”
    “Pika pika!” Pikachu replied happily.

    All of the pokemon were released from their pokeballs and greeted each other.

    Stevens walked up to Black Jack and offered his hand. “Ah, the famous Black Jack,” he said. “It’s a pleasure to finally meet you.”
    “Who’s this freak show?” Black Jack asked in an uninterested tone.
    “That’s detective Stevens,” Jenny replied. “The best detective in the world.”

    Black Jack gave a small “humph”, as he turned his attention to two more important people in Ash’s life, Brock and Misty.

    “What’s wrong with him?” Stevens asked in a puzzled tone.
    “Didn’t you know?” Jenny said. “Black Jack doesn’t like people working for the law, since he used to work for Team Rocket. I even had a hard time convincing him to come with us.”
    “How did you get him to come?” Stevens asked curiously.
    “I promised him that he would meet a lot of tough trainers.”
    “Ah! Then Black Jack is about to get what he wants.”

    “Brock,” Black Jack said. “How are things with your family?”
    “Everyone’s fine,” Brock replied. “My brother is still training to become the next Pewter City’s gym leader. After my dad retires, he’ll be taking over.”
    Black Jack smiled and spoke privately to him. “You’re only here for Officer Jenny, right?”
    “Oh yeah,” Brock said as he blushed a pinkish colour.

    Black Jack then turned his attention to Misty as he whispered to himself, “That Brock kid never quits.”

    “Long time, no see, Misty,” he called out.
    “Hi, Black Jack,” Misty replied back.
    “It’s been a while.”
    “Yeah, since the Hoenn League.”
    “You’re going on an adventure with Ketchum again?”
    “Yeah, I got a bit bored staying at the Cerulean City Gym.”

    She turned her head to look at Ash, who was getting caught in a noogie by Black Jack’s Nidoking. “Besides, someone’s got to keep an eye on him,” she continued with a smile.

    Black Jack then set his eyes on the frightened Jesse, James and Meowth, giving them a nasty frown. “What are they doing here?” he asked in a nasty tone.

    “Allow me to explain,” Stevens replied, stepping in. “These three were former members of Team Rocket, they’ve explained that Team Rocket’s been changed to Team Missile but they were put into community service anyway. I saw that they would be helpful in my detective work so I took them under my wing.”
    “Show-off!” Black Jack thought. “But at least we can keep those guys out of trouble for a while.”

    “This is great,” Jenny said. “Now the introductions are done, we now must book our rooms so we could take a night’s rest for tomorrow’s trip.”

    They all entered the pokemon center with Officer Jenny leading the way. “Nurse Joy?” she called out.

    “Yes? How can I help you?” Joy asked.

    Suddenly, a small blur rushed up to her and grasped her hands in a quick but gentle manner. It turned out that it was Brock, running up to her. “You can help me out by going on a date with me tonight before I leave for the Orre region tomorrow,” he said as he teeth sparkled. An anime sweat drop appeared on the back of Nurse Joy’s head.

    Misty immediately tugged Brock by the ear and pulled him away from Joy. “Let me help you out by getting you back to your senses,” Misty said with a frown.

    “All right, everybody,” Jenny announced. “Everyone have a good night’s rest. We will all leave early tomorrow morning. Once we get to the Orre region, we will all discuss the plan there. Any questions?”

    Everyone shook their heads, meaning that they don’t have any. “Good,” Jenny replied as she gave person a key each. “I’ll see you all tomorrow.”

    Elsewhere, a mysterious man, whose face that was hiding in the shadows, was sitting at his desk in a posh office room. Three men came into the room, looking quite battered and bruised. The mysterious man got up and checked the bruises on one of his men’s faces.

    “Where is he now?” he asked.
    “With them,” answered one of his men.
    After some thought, the mysterious man said, “They’re not taking us seriously, but he will soon enough. Come.”

    The mysterious man walked passed them out of his office while they followed.

    Next episode: Black Jack and his teammates will arrive at their next destination for a new adventure, the Orre region. Will they find the missing people, Wes and Rui? Will they find and defeat the Team Dark Leader? These questions will be answered soon!
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    Whoa, this rules! Short but sweet. Loved it. Keep it up!

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    Yay! Black Jack's here! *parties*

    The chapter was a little short, but it was awsome! I wonder who those guys were...

    C_M

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    Like DC said, short but sweet. Nidoking giving a noogie, seems like that would hurt. Noogie!
    I like you giving him a beard, I think that makes him funny.

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    Short, but sweet, as the others have said, glad to see Black Jack's back and now I'm definately looking forward to them getting to Orre. Heh, that ending was a good way to induce some more suspence as well...

    ~Chibi~


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    Oh! So it doesn't suck! I was a bit worried that it would because there was no action. Thanks you guys!

    Short, but sweet, as the others have said, glad to see Black Jack's back and now I'm definately looking forward to them getting to Orre. Heh, that ending was a good way to induce some more suspence as well...
    Believe me, you have no idea what Black Jack is capable of yet. You'll be seeing more suspense in the later chapters and episodes.

    Like DC said, short but sweet. Nidoking giving a noogie, seems like that would hurt. Noogie!
    I like you giving him a beard, I think that makes him funny.
    I assume that you found this chapter a humorous one, correct?

    I wonder who those guys were...
    You'll find out soon enough, CM.

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    (Continue or Reboot? That is the question.)

    Goldenrod High (Chaptered Comedy Multishipping fic PG13) Updated: 02/12/09
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    I assume that you found this chapter a humorous one, correct?
    Thats right! Sometimes I have a weird since of homur and laugh for hours on end with my friends on certain stuff. Though the noogie thing kind of reminded me of some flashbacks with me as Nidoking and Ash being some of my friends. Heh heh...
    ~~CS~~

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    Episode 2: Now entering the Orre Region

    Chapter 1

    It was very early in the morning as everyone in the group were getting ready to get on the ship that was about to travel to the Orre Region.

    After they set sail, they decided to browse around the ship since it would only take a couple of hours to get to their location. Black Jack leaned on the rails as he observed the beautiful sea. On the back of his mind, he remembered the time of how much his niece wanted to be with him for his new journey.

    -Flashback-

    Black Jack was relaxing at the backyard of a mansion, which belonged to John, his brother. The mansion was near Goldenrod City of the Johto region. John was a very rich man and owned his part of the company called Burgcorp, which created different types of electronic products for pokemon. Recently, John and his wife, Sandra had been away on business a lot, meaning that their daughter, Alice, was alone a lot. But since her uncle Black Jack was there, she would never be alone. But at that moment, she was taking a nap in her bedroom.

    Black Jack had a bottle of beer next to him. He sat up and drank a small portion of his favourite drink. While he was minding his own business, he heard a man calling his name. “Excuse me, Mr. Black Jack,” he said in a posh accent. “You have a visitor.”

    Black Jack looked over his shoulder and saw two people. One of them was bald, middle-aged man wearing a tuxedo. It was obvious to Black Jack that that was his brother’s butler. The other was a woman dressed in a police uniform, she had mixed green and blue hair tied in a small ponytail. “Officer Jenny?” Black Jack said in a confused tone. “What do you want?”

    Inside the sitting room of the mansion, Jenny explained the situation to him concerning the Orre Region and asked if he could go with her since he was one of the strongest pokemon masters. She also promised him that he would meet tough trainers.

    Black Jack gave it some thought. “Fine, I’ll go,” he said in a low tone. “But if this is going to be a waste of my time, don’t come to me again, ya hear?”
    “Can I come?” asked a girl’s voice.

    A little girl walked in the sitting room carrying a cuddly toy. She was wearing pink pyjamas and was being followed by Teddiursa and Eevee, both which belonged to her. Black Jack forced a small smile. “Like the police lady said, Alice,” he replied, knowing that she had been hearing to their conversation. “It’s a bit rough out there.”

    Alice looked down feeling rejected, knowing what her uncle meant. “Oh,” she said back as she sadly walked back to her room.

    Officer Jenny stood up. “Thank you for your co-operation and your acceptance to our request, Mr. Black Jack,” she said. “Meet us in Vermillion City in five days time, we will then set off for the Orre region the following day.”
    “Gotcha,” Black Jack replied in a down tone, knowing how sad Alice was feeling, and that made him feel bad about it.

    As Officer Jenny made her way out, Black Jack made his way to Alice’s room. As he came close to the door, he heard soft crying from the other side of the door. He opened it and saw her niece lying on her bed, crying tears on her pillow. Her Teddiursa and Eevee were trying to comfort her but as they saw Black Jack by the door, they moved slightly out of the way as he came over to her.

    “Alice,” he said in a concerned tone as he placed his hand on her shoulder. “Why the sad face?”
    “U-Uncle, go away,” Alice sobbed. “I don’t want you to see me cry.”
    “I’ve seen you cry once… about having to let go of some of your friends.”

    Alice teary eyes widened upon hearing that. “You know about that?”
    “Yeah,” Black Jack replied as he got up and walked over to her desk, which had small cuddly toys and a beautiful music box. When he opened up a nearby musical box, it played a small chiming tune and a small plastic doll wearing a ballet outfit spinning slowly. “Maybe this will calm you down while I talk to you,” he said.

    Alice sat up on her bed as she wiped away her tears while Black Jack sat next to her and placed his hand on her back.

    “You’re worried about not seeing me again, huh?” he asked.
    “Mm-hm,” Alice replied sadly as she nodded.

    Black Jack started his comforting lecture.

    “Alice, I know what it’s like to let go of your friends, even with the knowledge that you may not see them again. But you know, letting go of them is one of the bravest things you would ever have to do.”

    He looked at his loved one and smiled. “It seems to be me that you’re as brave as me, kid,” he said. “Let me give you one advice, as long as you keep them inside of your heart and mind, they’ll never go away.”

    Alice looked and forced a small smile, but that didn’t fool Black Jack one bit, as he knew how sad she was feeling.

    “Alice, don’t worry,” he said in an assuring tone. “After I’m done doing this thing, I’m gonna be coming back here anyway.”
    “Promise, uncle?” Alice asked in a hopeful tone, as she held her little finger out in a shape of a small hook. “Cos I heard that you would take me to the park with Little Sis and Big Brother.”

    Eevee, who was nicknamed Little Sis, and Teddiursa, nicknamed as Big Brother, leapt happily in small jumps upon hearing that.

    Black Jack let out a small laugh. “This promise will never be broken,” he said as he hooked his little finger onto hers.

    The following day, Black Jack was about to leave the mansion for his mission, with the butler accompanying him out of the mansion. “I wish John and Sandra were here,” he said. “But it’s a good thing I said goodbye to them yesterday on the phone.”

    He turned to look at the butler who was standing quite near him. “Take good care of Alice and her pokemon, okay?” Black Jack asked.
    “I will, sir,” the butler replied as he bowed slightly to him.
    “Uncle, wait!” cried a voice.

    Black Jack and the butler looked at the voice’s direction and it turned out to be Alice calling for Black Jack’s attention. “I have something made especially for you,” she said as she held out a wristband made out of flowers and placed it round Black Jack’s wrist.

    Her uncle smiled at the gift with admiration, he then loosened it and placed it back in her hands. “Look after this for me,” he said softly. “I’ll be back for it.”

    He then took off on his motorcycle, making his way to Vermilion City in Kanto. “Goodbye, uncle!” Alice cried as she waved him goodbye. After he was out of sight, she went back into the mansion with tears with in her eyes as she looked at the wristband. “I’ll miss you.”

    Black Jack also had tears in his eyes, as he rode his motorcycle to his next destination.

    -End flashback-

    “Alice…” Black Jack mumbled to himself.
    “Hey, Black Jack,” said a child’s voice.

    Black Jack turned to the voice’s direction and saw Ash, Pikachu and Misty walking up to him. “What?” he asked.
    “We spotted you being alone and decided to have a little chat with ya,” Misty replied.
    “Well, I was just thinking about some stuff,” Black Jack replied as he turned his face to the sea.
    “About what?” Ash asked.
    “The trainers of the Orre region,” Black Jack lied as he turned his attention back to the sea. “If they’re as tough as Officer Jenny say they are, I might consider staying there for a while or so.”
    “Inviting anyone?” Misty asked.
    “Nope. No one in particular,” Black Jack replied.
    “Not even Alice?” Ash asked.

    Black Jack became silent for a few moments as he looked down. The two young trainers knew how much Alice meant to him. “We’ll see…” Black Jack suddenly replied.

    Pikachu also noticed had sad Black Jack was feeling as he leapt off Ash’s shoulder and on to his and gently patted him on the head. “Pika pika,” he squealed softly.
    “Thanks, you little critter,” Black Jack replied, forcing a small smile.

    “Attention, passengers! We are moments away from the docks of the Orre region,” said an announcer, who was talking from some large speakers. “Would the passengers please collect your belongings and walk to the exit? Thank you for taking the St. Anne. We hope that you would visit us again.”

    “Sounds like our stop is coming up,” Black Jack said as he and his two cohorts walked towards the end of the ship and gazed at the horizon of the Orre region.

    “Thanks to you, Alice,” he thought deeply with a smile. “I now have a better reason to fight.”
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    wicked sweeeeeet!! i love it you are the best writer!! full of suspense!! i am awaiting the next chapie

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