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    Nice, I knew something was going to happen along those lines. Ash and the others are going to have real trouble getting around the place to find an exit. Anyway, here is the one mistake I found. This one has to do with tense,:

    Everyone was taking deep breaths as soon they have finished crawling through the smelly chute.

    It should be deep breaths as soon as they had finished crawling----

    Well there you are and until the next episode,
    Later.
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    it was short but full of suspense i would give it a 10.9 out of 10.00

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    ssw: Thanx, mate. I'll update soon.

    Cs32: Thanx for pointing out the mistake *Makes changes*. You haven't seen anything yet.

    Blaziken1234: I take it that this is your least favourite chapter. Thanx anyway.

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    Starring Black Jack, a veteran pokemon trainer who saves the lives of others while breaking necks of his enemies in cold blood. You want action? You got action!
    (Continue or Reboot? That is the question.)

    Goldenrod High (Chaptered Comedy Multishipping fic PG13) Updated: 02/12/09
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    Chapter 2

    Ash, Pikachu, Misty, Brock, Mecha, and Stevens were running through corridors to make their way to the exit. “Man! This place is like a maze!” Brock said in a frustrated tone.

    Ash suddenly saw a mysterious creature leaping around very fast and that caught his attention, slowing him down, only to realise that an electronic door slammed itself up, making him stuck on one side of the door and his teammates stuck on the other.

    That caught everyone’s attention. “Pikapi!” Pikachu cried worryingly. He, Brock, Misty, and Stevens tried to break the door down but to no avail. Not even Mecha can break it down.

    “Ash!” Misty cried in a worried tone. “Are you okay?”
    “I’m fine!” Ash yelled in reply, hoping that they could hear him. “But I can’t open this door!”
    “C’mon, you guys!” Mecha said. “We have to find another route!”

    Realising that his friends and loved ones were running around to look for him, Ash decided to look for them as well. As he ran around into different rooms, he felt that something hit him in the face, knocking him down. Ash quickly got up and looked around in confusion. “Who did that!?” he demanded.

    Suddenly, to his surprise, a strange creature appeared. It had a human-like body but he had green reptile skin with zigzag patterns, it also had human feet and hands and also had a head of a familiar reptile pokemon but its eyes looked more sinister. Ash quickly took out his pokedex and pointed at the creature.

    “Pokemon unidentified,” the pokedex said.

    “Say what!?” Ash said in shock.

    Without warning, the creature turned itself invisible again, making Ash vulnerable to any of its attack. “Wait a minute,” Ash thought as he took out a pokeball off his belt. “I’ve been in this situation before.”

    “Sceptile, go!” Ash yelled as he tossed out his pokeball. A large green gecko pokemon materialised when he became released from his pokeball, and placed a small twig in his mouth.

    “Let’s see,” Ash thought, being cautious. “Kecleon has the ability to turn itself invisible… so that means that Sceptile and I will have to listen to the sounds.”

    “Sceptile,” Ash said, catching Sceptile’s attention. “This pokemon has turned itself invisible, don’t use your eyes to look for it, use your ears to listen to whatever sound it makes.”

    Sceptile nodded to his trainer, as he understood his instructions and got himself ready for battle.

    Both Sceptile and Ash closed their eyes with the intention of listening to the sounds that the creature was going to make.

    They heard some clanging sounds nearby, catching Ash and Sceptile’s attention. They immediately opened their eyes and closed them again, waiting for another sound to come up. They then heard some light and quick footsteps coming towards them. “Sceptile!” Ash yelled. “Attack it now! Slam attack!”

    Sceptile swung his tail towards the incoming attacker, but for some reason, it looked like he missed and was hit instead by the invisible creature in the stomach. “So that mutant Kecleon is pretty quick too,” Ash thought as he gnarled his teeth.

    Sceptile fell hard on the floor but quickly got back up. “Try to keep calm, Sceptile,” Ash said. “We still have to keep to our strategy.”

    Sceptile and Ash closed their eyes again, waiting for the creature to attack again. As expected, the invisible creature made another sound as it attempted another attack but this time, Ash shouted out another command. “Sceptile, Endure!”

    Sceptile tensed himself as the creature hit him in the gut. Even with great impact the creature made, Sceptile showed no pain. After withstanding the attack, he instinctively went behind it, grabbed it and held it in a chokehold by wrapping his arms around, assumingly, its head. The creature became visible again as it lost its concentration of keeping itself invisible and fell to its knees.

    After a long struggle of surviving the chokehold, the monster suddenly found the strength to stand up while Sceptile was still holding on, much to Ash and Sceptile’s surprise. “What’s it going to do!?” Ash yelled.

    The monster ran to a wall with Sceptile still hanging on its back neck. Before anyone could react what was going on the monster turned round and slammed Sceptile into the wall. “Don’t give up, Sceptile!” Ash yelled. “Stay tough and hang in there!”

    The monster kept on slamming Sceptile onto the walls until Sceptile released the monsters neck, letting the monster free from his grasp. “Sceptile! No!” Ash cried, upon seeing Sceptile releasing the monster.

    Sceptile fell on its back looking very hurt as he held his hurt back. Ash took out Sceptile’s pokeball and was about to call him back. Upon seeing that, the creature zoomed over to him and knocked it out of his hand and punched him in the face, knocking him down.

    Ash shook away his dizziness as he looked at the monster walking away from him and towards his injured Sceptile. Not wanting to get his pokemon hurt anymore, Ash ran over to the monster and forcefully turned him around and punched him in the face. The monster retaliated by grabbing him by the neck, choking him and holding him up in the air.

    Sceptile slowly got up to his feet while watching his trainer being choked by the monster. Not wanting to see him getting tortured, he suddenly glowed brightly green and quickly walked over to the monster. Like Ash did, he forcefully turned the monster around and punched him into the face, causing a blinding flash of light upon impact. The creature released Ash’s neck and fell unconsciously to the floor.

    After giving that devastating punch, the glow around Sceptile’s body slowly faded away and he fell to the floor, taking heavy breaths while holding his hurt back. Ash was also breathing heavily as he walked over to his gecko pokemon. “Good job, Sceptile,” Ash said as he took out his pokeball. “You need a long rest.”

    As Sceptile materialised back into his pokeball, Ash heard footsteps. He turned round and saw a large man in Team Dark grunt suit coming his way. “Great!” Ash said. “More trouble.”

    The grunt took a pokeball off his belt tossed it out. A Blaziken materialised as it came out of his pokeball. “You shouldn’t have picked first, bud,” Ash said as he picked out a pokeball of his own. “Go! Swellow!”

    He tossed out the pokeball and a black, white and red bird pokemon materialised as it popped out of its pokeball. “Swellow! Swellow!” it squawked. The two trainers and their respective pokemon stood ready for battle.
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    Pokemon Impact (PG13):
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    Starring Black Jack, a veteran pokemon trainer who saves the lives of others while breaking necks of his enemies in cold blood. You want action? You got action!
    (Continue or Reboot? That is the question.)

    Goldenrod High (Chaptered Comedy Multishipping fic PG13) Updated: 02/12/09
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    very good.i liked it!i can't wait for the next chapter.

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    oooooooo a mystery pokemon wil it b reveled? cant wait... ne way i was not my least fav. i liked it but i cant think of ne thing else to type

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    Good job 'ey! One hell of an improvement IMO ^_^

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    Hey, recieved your PM and look where I ended up.
    Incredible, love the ties between Pokemon and Pokemon Collesseum.
    Can't wait to read more. I love the Pokeshipping ties as well. Yes, I am a Pokeshipper, and if any of you have a problem, don't go arguing with me about it.
    Anyway, great chapter! I am SO looking forward to next chapter!!!

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    ssw: Thanks, the next chapter will be here soon. Say... tomorrow.

    Blaziken1234: Er... the mysterious pokemon has been revealed... it's a mutated version of Kecleon. Now Ash has to face a grunt with a Blaziken and you'll be surprised at what happens next episode.

    Dark Charizard: Thanx, mate.

    Shining Lugia: Ladies and gents, welcome one of the new reviewers of my fic, Shining Lugia. SL, thanks for the review. I was thinking about doing a tie between the anime and the colosseum series because no one else was doing it. DC, don't start a war with her just because she's a you-know-what.

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    Pokemon Impact (PG13):
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    Starring Black Jack, a veteran pokemon trainer who saves the lives of others while breaking necks of his enemies in cold blood. You want action? You got action!
    (Continue or Reboot? That is the question.)

    Goldenrod High (Chaptered Comedy Multishipping fic PG13) Updated: 02/12/09
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    Chapter 3

    The mysterious Team Dark grunt and his Blaziken stood calm and silent as they waited for Ash to call out his attack. “The way this guy’s standing looks familiar,” Ash thought while looking at the grunt.

    “Go, Swellow!” he yelled. “Wing attack!”
    “Fire Punch,” the grunt said calmly.

    As Swellow flew straight at Blaziken, flames engulfed on Blaziken’s paws as he charged at Swellow. To Ash and Swellow’s surprise, Blaziken ran passed the bird pokemon. A bigger shock came on Ash’s face as he thought that Blaziken was going to attack him. But another surprise came on Ash’s face again as Blaziken ran passed him.

    Ash looked behind him and noticed that Blaziken had caught something… or possibly nothing.

    Blaziken swung his clenched paw forward and landed on someone or something invisible as it turned itself visible. It turned out to be another creature that looked like the previous attacker; only it had purple reptile skin.

    It fell to its knees, holding its hurt gut. As it looked up, Blaziken glared at him with his fiery eyes before giving him a strong punch to the face, knocking him out.

    Ash stared at Blaziken in shock and puzzlement. “But how… why…” he said in puzzlement.

    “Always know who your enemies are,” the grunt said, catching Ash’s attention. He took off his cap to reveal his identity. “That blow that Sceptile delivered to the first attacker was a real ace, Ketchum,” he continued with a smile.

    “What the…” Ash said in a shock. “Black Jack!?! Where are the others and what’s with the costume!?”

    “Sorry about that, Ketchum,” Black Jack replied. “The kids and I decided to take a rest for the night, so I went off for a little walk while the others took a nap, I spotted this base so I went inside. And the costume, good for entering and escaping.”

    Ash then remembered what was also happening at that very moment when he called back Swellow into his pokeball. He explained the situation happening so far and that they must escape the building before the bomb explodes.

    “Simple,” Black Jack said as he took out another pokeball. “Go! Tyranitar!”

    He tossed out his pokeball and Tyranitar materialised as he became released from his pokeball. “Blaziken! Tyranitar!” Black Jack yelled. “Smash that wall!”

    Both of his pokemon ran and smash the wall, revealing a huge hole showing the outside of the building. “Nice job, boys,” Black Jack said as he held up two pokeballs. “Return!”

    Black Jack took a look at how high the ground was from his location, he then turned around to look at Ash. “It’s not that far down,” Black Jack said. “But if you have to, use your flying pokemon or use any pokemon that knows Vine Whip.”

    “Wow!” Ash thought in an impressed tone. “That was… too easy.”

    He turned around to make his exit. “See you later, Ketchum,” he said.

    He jumped out of the hole and landed on his feet outside the building. He then continued walking away, knowing that he would meet up with them at the final rendezvous point.

    Back at Ash’s location, Misty, Brock, Stevens, Mecha and Pikachu finally caught up with him and noticed a huge hold on the wall. “You made a hole!” Mecha said. “Why didn’t I think of that?”

    “Good,” Stevens said. “We can now make our escape.”

    “Wait,” Ash said. “We have two injured pokemon here.”

    His teammates looked at the two unconscious monsters lying on the floor. “What are they?” Brock asked in puzzlement.

    “No need to worry about that now,” Stevens said. “We have to take them with us.”

    Ash took out one of his pokeballs and tossed them out. “Meganium!” he yelled as he tossed it out. “I choose you!”

    A green dinosaur-like pokemon came out of his pokeball and yelled out her cry. “Meganium,” Ash said. “Lace your vines around us and lift us down to the bottom.”

    Meganium did as she was instructed as she laced her vines around everyone’s bodies. “We don’t have much time left,” Stevens warned, referring to the time bomb he planted earlier. “We only have one minute left.”

    Despite Stevens’s warning, Meganium and the others stayed calm as Meganium steadily placed the group on the ground floor of the outside of the building. “Twenty seconds left,” Stevens warned as he checked his watch.

    Ash immediately took out his pokeball and called Meganium back into her pokeball. “Fifteen seconds left,” Stevens yelled. “Let’s run for it!”

    Everyone was running as far away as possible from the building, with the two mutated Kecleons being carried by Mecha.

    5… 4… 3… 2… 1…

    The base exploded and everyone lost their balance, falling to the ground. They all picked themselves up and looked at the destruction of the base. They all sighed with relief as Stevens took out his cell phone and dialled a number on it.

    “Pyrite Police Station,” said a woman’s voice on the other phone.
    “Detective Stevens here,” Stevens said. “Requesting ambulance from the pokemon center, reporting two inured…”

    He looked at the two monsters, wondering what they were. “Pokemon,” he finished.

    “Make it three,” Ash said. “Sceptile’s injured as well.”

    “Did you hear that?” Stevens said. “We have three injured pokemon.”

    As the others took deep breaths after some running, Ash looked at the destruction of the base. Misty walked up to him and held him by the hand, catching his attention. They both exchanged smiles and then looked at the destruction of the building. “Thanks, Black Jack,” Ash thought, remembering one particular past event. “I owe you one.”

    Meanwhile, the shadowy figure was viewing a monitor in a dark room. “They destroyed my third base!” he snarled in frustration. He then smiled and let out an evil s******. “But still… I’ll have the last laugh… and he who laughs last, laughs loudest.”

    Next episode: Wes and his team visits a casino called the Big Texan, looking to find some clues about the Team Dark leader’s plans.

    EDIT:
    I know that this is a late announcement and I don't like to brag, but I and two of my fanfics are up on the nominations of the PokeOscars Awards!

    I'm on the Best Action Writer AND Best Comedy Writer category.

    My first fanfic, Pokemon Impact is in the Best Action Fanfiction category (You couldn't find it in this section cos it's in the Completed Fic section)

    One of my one-shots, James's Moneymaking Scheme, is in the Most Hilarious One-Shot category.

    Last but not least, Black Jack Vs Ash is in the Most Exciting Battle category, which is on thread page 4 of Pokemon Impact, Episode 7, Chapter 2-5!

    Give these a good read, and if you think that any of these are the best ones... vote for these and vote for me please! *Bribes*

    For the polls:
    Which one these guys is your favourite character/hero so far?
    Wes or Ash or Black Jack

    Which one is these teams is your favourite team so far?
    1. Wes, Rui, Officer Jenny, Jesse and James
    Or
    2. Black Jack, Isaac Wolfpack, Max, May, Meowth
    Or
    3. Ash, Brock, Misty, Detective Stevens, Mecha
    Last edited by Brian Powell; 13th April 2005 at 2:42 PM.

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    Starring Black Jack, a veteran pokemon trainer who saves the lives of others while breaking necks of his enemies in cold blood. You want action? You got action!
    (Continue or Reboot? That is the question.)

    Goldenrod High (Chaptered Comedy Multishipping fic PG13) Updated: 02/12/09
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    Hey, mate, sorry it took so long, I’m still banned, but let’s just say I found a way to read fics without having to sneak online. This is a review for all the chapters except the most recent one. I have to write reviews/read at home on MS Word, so I don’t yet have time to read the most recent one.
    Since I pasted everything onto MS word, I caught a lot of errors, so, beware, I went all out in chronological order staring with Ep 3, Chap 1:
    “Is everyone ready?” officer Jenny called out
    Capital O.
    Suddenly, Jesse and James popped their head’s out
    Heads shouldn’t be possessive.
    Rui and Plusle looked at its direction. Rui took a pair of binoculars out of her carry bag and looked into it so she can see what’s going at the far distance.
    She could see what was going on. Tense switch in the middle. And look at its direction sounds a bit awkward. It’s not incorrect, but “in its direction” sounds more natural.
    Cacnea immediately gave James a big loving hug and at the same time piercing his Mechas into James’s skin.
    Either pierced or drop the and.
    “THIS IS FOR HURTING MY WES!!” Rui yelled as she smashed her mallet on the tank, created a huge dent in it.
    Adverb clause, so it should be creating.
    The tank began to malfunction and the tentacles began to loosen up
    Comma after the and.
    Officer Jenny and the others were about to give chase but to their distraction, the machine exploded. The force made everyone fall down as they lost balance.
    Comma after but, although the word distraction, meaning either confusion of distraction, which doesn’t sound right. Espeon had just ZapCannoned so they’d be expecting it so maybe dismay or something would be better.
    The grunt wasted no time as he took control of the robot as it ran towards Wes and attempted to punch him but missed as Wes dodged out of the way, taking Rui along with him.
    Comma after but again, if it’s a compound sentence it needs one.
    “You don’t need to count on a piece of jewellery to have good luck,”
    Jewelry. I hope, now I’m worried that any spelling errors could actually be correct in England. XP
    “Thanks, officer Jenny,” she replied.
    Again, it’s a title, so a capital O.
    Before anyone can answer, the trio realised
    Could answer, seeing as realized is past, the first part should be past as well.
    “Why you…” Isaac snarled angrily as he started pummelling the grunt about.
    Pummeling has one l.
    (There were more, but I lost them, the comp deleted my review and I didn’t save it, so I don’t want to look for ‘em again >> I also discovered something I didn’t know, apparently words like recognized, organization, and such are spelled with s’s in England, because I started pointing them out as errors, but then realized there were too many for them to be errors. =P

    Isn’t it fun when readers begin with everything wrong? Well keep in mind that all those were from the past lot of chapters all combined, and is almost as much as all of the ones I noticed when proofing just my chapter 11. And I never would have noticed those if I hadn’t been proofing on MS Word. XP Now onto that actual review:

    It certainly was a nice read to distract me from the annoyance of siblings during a long car ride. XP I liked all of the tank mayhem and the battles were nice as usual. The sweatdrops, mallets, and other animé bits were funny The part with Mecha, Ash, and them was cool, especially with the twist with them getting trapped and the mutant Kecleon.

    Great job, keep it up!

    ~Chibi~


    Ever wondered what would happen if humans had the power to overthrow the Legendaries? To either use them for their own ends, or eliminate them altogether? One thing is for certain...the balance between human and Legendary is unstable.

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    very good.i liked it!hope you update soon!

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    Cool! ^_^ I especially liek the count-down part. Keep it up!

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    First off, here are some mistakes I found.

    Meganium and the others stayed calm as Meganium steadily placed ground on the ground floor of the outside of the building. “Twenty seconds left,” Stevens warned as he checked his watch.
    Do you mean Meganium and the others stayed calm as Meganium steadily placed the group onto the ground?

    They all sighed with relieve as Stevens took out his cell phone and dialled a number on it.
    It should be relief here.
    Now they are actually closer to finding this leader of this team. Do you think this fic will be shorter or longer than Pokemon Impact? Because Pokemon Impact was long with Cassie and that Ninja dude. For the polls, Ash is my favorite though Jack Black was in Pokemon Impact Series 1. Also, I like team #3. Ash, Brock, Misty, Detective Stevens, and Mecha.
    Later
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    So far, so good. And Black Jack vs. Ash was a rather exciting battle. I can easily see why it was nominated, as well as your story! I'm very happy for you!

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    Chibi Pika: In my opinion, if you're trip was optional, then there was no reason for your mom to get mad. Right, back to my response...

    Thanks for pointing out the mistakes but there are words that are spelt that way in England like 'pummelling'. *Makes a few changes*. I guess I rely on MS Word too much cos I let it do the checking for me. Thanx 4 d review.

    ssw: Thanx, it'll be updated soon.

    Dark Charizard: Yes, the countdown adds to the action doesn't it? Thanx.

    Cs32: Thanx for spotting the mistakes, mate. *Changes* As of now, I'm not quite sure whether this series is going to be longer or not, it depends of what I can think up. Thanx.

    Shining Lugia: Aw, shucks... like a kiss on a cheek. Thank you.

    As a treat I decided to place some lyrics as a theme song for Pokemon Impact: Series 2...

    Whatever by Our Lady Peace

    There's no holding me back,
    I'm not driven by fear, I'm just driven by anger.
    And you're under attack,
    I'm just climbing up slowly, I'm the one and only, I...
    The tease, the ways you lie,
    Stumble in your mind.
    The fear, the hope inside,
    They hit here.

    But whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.
    Whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.

    There's no holding me back,
    I'm not driven by fear, I'm just driven by anger.
    And you're under attack,
    I'm just climbing up slowly, I'm the one and only, I...

    The tease, the ways you lie,
    Stumble in your mind.
    The fear, the hope inside,
    They hit here.

    But whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.
    Whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.
    But whatever you need, ever you got...

    But whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.
    Whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.
    But whatever you need, ever you got, ever you want,
    I’ll take it back again.
    But whatever you need, ever you got...

    Whatever you...
    Whatever you want.
    Whatever you...
    Whatever you want.

    Well, boys and girls, what do you think?

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    Thanks for the card, Skiks
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    Starring Black Jack, a veteran pokemon trainer who saves the lives of others while breaking necks of his enemies in cold blood. You want action? You got action!
    (Continue or Reboot? That is the question.)

    Goldenrod High (Chaptered Comedy Multishipping fic PG13) Updated: 02/12/09
    Who says school is just for learning? ^^

    Check out my other stories, and everyone else's in the Completed Fics forum!

    Been doing some singing and voice impressions too! Check me out at the Brian Random Channel Thread!

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    now that was an awsome chapter!!! 2? wow i thought there was 1... blak jaks disquize was cool and how calm and strong he is... wow i dont no how u came up with him

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    Default Episode 6: Brawling and car chasing: Texan style

    Blaziken1234: Thanks. And like I said before, you ain't seen nothing yet. How I came up with Black Jack? I'll tell you when I have the time.

    Episode 6: Brawling and car chasing: Texan style

    Chapter 1:

    It was a few hours after one of the Team Dark bases was shut down in Andaa city, where Wes, Rui and others were. They were gathering at the entrance of the pokemon center, where Jenny received information from one of her informants via cell phone.

    “What is it, officer Jenny?” Rui asked.
    “I was just informed that we could find some information from a spy working for us,” Jenny replied. “This spy’s named Ms. Laura Macey. She’ll be performing at a nearby casino called the Big Texan.”
    “Laura Macey,” Wes mumbled to himself.
    “What was that?” Rui asked.
    “Nothing, just mumbling,” Wes replied, although this didn’t convince Rui as she had a suspicion that Wes might know this girl by the tone of his voice.

    “Ooohh,” James said excitedly after hearing the word ‘casino’. “What to wear?”
    “Just stay away from skirts, James,” Wes said with a bored look on his face.

    It didn’t take them long to get a change of clothes and making their way to the Big Texan casino. James was wearing an orange tuxedo and sunglasses while his partner, Jesse, wore a beautiful light purple dress. Wes was wearing a black and white tux while Rui held on to his arm wearing a white tanktop with a black furry coat over it and black leather mini skirt, with Plusle riding over her shoulder. Officer Jenny came in wearing a tight purple dress and red high-heeled shoes.

    “Nothing can beat the smell of money flying all over the place,” James said gleefully.
    “Either that or it’s the smell of senior citizens and bad smelling perfume,” Wes replied, sounding unimpressed.

    In an office of the casino, a man in a Texan business suit and a cowboy hat sat at one side of a desk while a man in a black suit sat at the other. The man in the black suit handed over five photos, each containing faces of Wes, Rui, Jesse, James and officer Jenny. “Under any circumstances, do not allow these five people to leave this place… kill them while you’re at it.”

    “Humph,” the Texan said. “Give me one good reason why I should do this in front of my customers and the public?”

    The man in the suit placed a briefcase on the desk and opened it, revealing a huge neat pile of cash. Convinced, the Texan said, “No one calls me Rough Jake for nothin’. Heh heh.”

    Wes, Rui, James, Jesse, and Jenny made their way to the barroom of the casino and a waiter greeted them politely. He led them to a suitable table that was big enough for five people and also had five chairs.

    As they sat down, a man in a suit walked up onto the stage carrying a microphone. “Ladies and gentlemen,” he cried enthusiastically. “Welcome to the Big Texan! Now let me introduce to you, one of the most gorgeous ladies around, Ms. Laura Macey!”

    Everyone applauded, showing their appreciation of the arrival of the upcoming performer. A beautiful woman walked up on stage, wearing a beautiful blue dress. “How are you doin’, you little cute growlithe?” she said, sounding cute. Some of the men in the audience barked at her jokingly.

    “If only Brock was here now,” Wes said as he scratched his head.

    She started to sing using the microphone while the music was playing in the background…

    I’m going out tonight, I’m feeling alright, gonna let it all hang out
    Wanna make some noise, even raise my voice, yeah I wanna scream and shout
    No innovations, make no conditions, get a little outta line
    I ain’t gonna act, a little precorrect, I only wanna have a good time
    The best thing about being a woman
    Is the provocative to have a little fun yeah


    As she came to the chorus, the back black curtain was lifted, showing a band full of men wearing black tight shirts, jeans and shoes.

    Oh, oh, oh, go totally crazy, forget I’m a lady
    Men, shirt, short skirts, oh, oh, oh
    Really go wild, yeah, doing it in style
    Oh, oh, oh, get in the action, feel the attraction
    Color my hair, do what I dare, oh, oh, oh
    I wanna be free, yeah, feel the way I feel
    Man, I feel like a woman


    She took off her dress to show a more revealing outfit, making most men, like James, gaze at her dreamily. Jesse noticed this and nastily narrowed her eyes at him. “She’s a big show-off!” Rui said in an annoyed tone. “Isn’t that right, Wes?”

    She turned her attention to Wes, but he disappeared. “Where did he go?” she asked as she looked around.

    Wes crept to the back of stage where other performers were getting ready to get on stage, mainly women. He spotted a man wearing the same attire as the other men in the band, holding a guitar and was ready to go on stage to perform his guitar solo.

    Wes couldn’t believe his luck as he crept up behind the man and grabbed him from behind.

    Back on stage, Laura and the band were still performing the song.

    Oh, oh, oh, go totally crazy, forget I’m a lady
    Men, shirt, short skirts, oh, oh, oh
    Really go wild, yeah, doing it in style
    Oh, oh, oh, get in the action, feel the attraction
    Color my hair, do what I dare, oh, oh, oh
    I wanna be free, yeah, feel the way I feel
    Man, I feel like a woman

    After she finished singing that part, Wes jumped on stage wearing the black attire, playing the guitar like a professional, and dancing at the same time. His team-mates were surprised to see him on stage, with Rui getting angry.

    “Psst, Laura” Wes whispered loudly, catching her attention. “I gotta talk to you.”
    “What? Wes?” Laura responded covering her microphone.
    “Yeah, it’s something important,” Wes replied, still playing on the guitar. “Where can we talk?”
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    nice...does wes have a crush? will the jelous riu hurt mrs. macey? o no i cant wait (werr they again?) ne way thnks i am turning 12 (tha would b y i am in sane...lol)

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    Theme song was awesome, chapter was awesome, once again a beautiful job!

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    I know where you got that song! I have to thank my parents for listening to crazy country music all the time, so I know that was "I Feel Like A Women". It was one of the first country songs I herd when I herd my parents listening to the music. Also, I wasn't here yesterday because I was playing World of Warcraft from 5:30 to 7:00, to 7:30 to 12:30. That game is so freaking addictive! I really didn't see any mistakes, so if there were any, they were jst minor ones. Now you have that song stuck into my head again, Oh, oh, oh. Yes, i'm weird I know though I guy can't help it when he heres this music 24/7.
    Later
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    Blaziken1234: You'll find out more next chapter.

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    Chapter 2

    After Laura and Wes finished performing their act on stage, they made their way to Laura’s dressing room. In the room was a desk made out of polished wood with a mirror, different types of make-up and a stool in front of the desk. The carpet on the floor was red and comfy. The upper walls had red and white striped wallpaper while the lower walls were completely red. The ceiling was white and a chandelier in the center of the ceiling. Next to one of the walls was a comfy black sofa, enough for three or four people to sit. There was also another door next to the desk.

    “Phew, that was close,” she said in relief upon entry. “That dancing you did was quite awkward but you’ve pulled if off in the end.”

    She walked behind a dressing board. “Do you mind turning around so I can change?”
    “Sure thing,” Wes replied, as he turned round.
    “It has been a while,” Laura said, starting a conversation.
    “Sure has,” Wes replied. “What have you been doing recently?”
    “Performing at this casino,” she replied back. “The men can be a little bit flirty but the pay’s good.”
    “And this thing about Team Dark?” Wes asked.
    “So you know?” She asked in response, knowing what Wes was talking about. She came out from behind the dressing board. She was now dressed in a leather suit like a female spy normally wears.

    “So you’re also a spy for the police?” Wes asked in realisation.
    “They’re paying me good for this occasion,” Laura replied, walking over to her mirror taking her makeup off. “Usually after we’ve split up, I worked for leaders of criminal organisations and gangs.”

    “I see that you’ve done well for yourself,” Wes replied as she placed away her makeup. “Am I’m not only talking about your night job.”

    Laura looked and smiled. “Thanks,” she replied taking that remark as a compliment. They then heard some shouting outside.

    “Let me in!” shouted a girl’s voice. “He is in there!”

    Wes walked over to the door and opened it, revealing five familiar figures trying to get in but were being held back by security guards, much to his surprise. “Wes, there you are!!” Rui yelled. “Get these freaks to let go of us!”

    “It’s okay, boys!” Laura shouted from the background. “They’re friends!”

    The security guards released them and they entered the room. Upon entry, they noticed Laura in the suit. “Laura,” Jenny said. “Have you got the information?”

    “Yes,” Laura replied and handed over a card to her. On one side, it had red patterns and on the other was a letter Q on two corners with a diamond pattern underneath, most of the side had a weird picture of two upper bodies of a women drawn together with a crown of each head.

    “This isn’t information!” Jesse complained as he grabbed the card. “This is a queen of diamonds! What kind of sick joke is this!?”

    “It’s hidden, dimwit,” Wes said. “Spies always have a knack of hiding things, just in case it falls into the wrong hands.”
    “There’s some information behind this card,” Laura explained.
    “It’s not really behind anything,” Rui said, being a little confused.

    Suddenly, a voice of a Texan was heard. “We all know ya’ll in there!!” he shouted. “Say your prayers!”

    “They know something!” Laura warned. “You guys better get outta here!”

    Wes and his teammates did as they were told as they ran out of the other door. Three men came crashing into the room. One of them was medium built and was wearing a Texan business suit and a cowboy hat, that man was none other than Rough Jake. Two other men were wearing the same attire but they were quite larger.

    “Take care of that girl!” Jake ordered as he chased the others.
    “Sure thing, boss!” one of the larger men yelled.

    The two men were about to grab Laura but she leapt and grabbed onto the chandelier and kicked both of them in the face, knocking them out. She then let go of the chandelier and landed on her feet. “That was… too easy,” she said in an impressed tone.

    Meanwhile, Wes, Rui and Jenny were making their escape as they were running to the entrance. “Who has the card?” Jenny asked.

    They made an immediate stop. “Well I don’t,” Wes said.
    “Neither do I,” Rui said.
    “Plusle,” Plusle squeaked.
    “Then… who does?” Jenny asked.

    At another location of the building, Jesse and James were also attempting to make their escape and noticed a ladder that led to the upper deck of the casino. “Women and children first!” Jesse yelled.
    “I agree!!” James said in a cowardly tone as he shoved Jesse out of the away, he quickly grabbed the ladder and started climbing ahead of her.

    As they got to the upper deck, James was leading the way until a boxing glove, out of nowhere, punched him in the face, knocking him down, much to Jesse’s shock.

    James shook his head to gain consciousness and saw a pokemon wearing strange purple clothing. It had thin legs and arms with a punching glove on each arm.

    “A hitmonchan!” James yelled as he quickly got back up.
    “Now that’s what I’m talkin’ about, you punk!” a large man shouted in a Texan accent, who was also wearing a cowboy suit. It turned out that he was one of Jake’s men.

    “Don’t just stand there, James!” Jesse yelled. “Use Cacnea or something!”
    “Oh right!” James replied in realisation as he took out a pokeball. “Go! Cacnea!” he yelled as he chucked it out.

    Cacnea became released from his pokeball and gave James a big friendly hug, making him scream in pain. “Cacnea!” He screamed. “Pin missile attack!”

    Cacnea leapt off James and shot numerous pins out of his thorns but Hitmonchan successfully defended himself by knocking away each one.

    “Hitmonchan!” the man yelled. “Mega Punch attack!”

    The punching pokemon’s glove glowed vigorously as he slammed it right in Cacnea’s face, knocking it back into James’s face, knocking him down also.

    Cacnea quickly recovered as it leapt of its trainer’s face. Seeing his unconscious face, Cacnea’s face turned red with anger. The man started laughing. “Wot’cha gonna do?” he taunted. “Run over to ya mommy?”

    That made it even angrier and it started to glow. As James gained consciousness, he looked at his glowing pokemon as it began to change shape.

    “It’s… evolving!!” James cried as tears of joy came flowing out of his eyes.

    Cacnea transformed into a larger pokemon. Its arms and legs have gotten longer and wider as it had a strange mane shaped like a pyramid on its head. “Cacturne!!” it cried.

    “Cacturne,” James cried, still being happy. “I’m so happy.”

    Cacturne turned his attention to Hitmonchan as it prepared itself for battle. “Go, Cacturne!” James yelled. “Needle Arm!”

    “Hitmonchan! Fire Punch attack!” the man yelled.

    Hitmonchan’s glove engulfed in flames as he aimed his punch at Cacturne, but Caturne dodged the attack as he punched Hitmonchan in the face with its thorned paw, making it wincing in pain holding its hurt face.

    Cacturne continued punching Hitmonchan about in the body and face. “That’s not boxing!!” Jesse yelled. “Bite its ear!!”

    Cacturne finally finished its attack as it landed a heavy punch on Hitmonchan’s face, sending him flying back to its trainer. The man and his pokemon fell over the barricade and into one of the gambling tables, making the gamblers complain.

    “We did it, Cacturne!” James cried happily as he got his pokeball out. “But we got no time to celebrate! Return!”

    Cacturne was zapped back into its pokeball and James looked at it happily. “James!” Jesse’s voice yelled. “Help me out here!”

    James turned around to see Jesse struggling to get away from another one of Jake’s henchmen. “Hey!” he yelled as he took the card out of his pocket. “I’m the one who got the card, not her!”

    Realising what he said, sweatdrops appeared on his and Jesse’s heads. “Whoops,” he said. The henchman released Jesse and chuckled as he held James at the barricade.

    “I’ll take that playing card!” he said as he snatched the card away from him.

    “It’s not that easy!” James replied as he kicked the man where the sun doesn’t shine, making him drop the card and wince in pain. James looked at the card floating downwards towards one of the gambling tables.

    “Don’t just stand there, James!” Jesse yelled. “Go and get it!”

    With slight hesitation, James jumped on the barricade and then jumped towards the card, attempting to catch it but to no avail as he fell and crashed into another gambling table, followed by being yelled at by another bunch of unsatisfied gamblers.

    Wes spotted the card floating towards another gambling table and rushed towards it. Unlucky for him, it landed in a small card-shuffling machine, being watched by a card dealer.

    He took out a five-dollar note out of his pocket and placed it on the gambling table. “C’mon, boys and girls!” the card dealer said enthusiastically. “Place your bet, being lucky’s your test! Everyone’s a winner! …Well, not everyone.”

    “Here’s ma money!” a gambler wearing a tuxedo said as he placed a couple of plastic coins on the table. “Now play!”

    “Card, sir?” the card dealer asked Wes as he gave him two cards.
    “Hit me!” Wes replied.
    “No!” the card dealer said. “You need to look at your cards first, son! Or are you as slow as a Slowpoke?”

    Wes looked at his cards and they revealed to be two aces, one of them being a diamond, another being a club. “Hit me,” He replied as he placed the cards down.

    “Hey!” the impatient gambler complained. “Hit me first!”
    “Wait your turn, sir,” the card dealer said as he gave Wes another card, turning out to be a five of spades.

    “Hit me,” Wes said again, still looking for the queen of diamonds that Laura gave him and his group, but still no luck.

    As the hitting continued, the gambler was getting more impatient as he continued shouting at the dealer to hit him. Having enough, the card dealer gave the gambler a small frown and hit him on the head with a small mallet, making him wince in pain. “You’re the boss,” he said.

    He then turned his attention to Wes, who saw the dealer hitting the impatient gambler on the head. “Card, sir?” the dealer asked.

    “Hit me,” Wes said, hoping that the card would be card he’s looking for. As he hoped, the dealer placed the queen of diamonds on the table.
    “Twenty one!” the dealer yelled excitedly. “We have a winner!”
    “Thanks!” Wes yelled as he noticed more of Jake’s men running towards him. “But keep the five dollars!” he continued as he quickly snatched the card and made his exit.
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    Awesome, I loved how Wes played blackjack. Wes is well described. I really hope you continue!!!!

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    Shining Lugia: Thanks, mate. Yeah, the game was quite humourous. Here's more!

    Heh... where are the other guys?

    Chapter 3

    Rui, Plusle and Jenny were outside of the casino to look for a car. Jenny took out her police badge and was about to run up to one of the driven cars. But to their surprise, a huge car drove up to them and it turned out to be Laura driving it, much to Rui’s annoyance.

    “Guys!” Laura called. “Where are Wes and the others?”
    “They’re still inside,” Jenny replied.

    They heard some running footsteps and turned their attention to them. It was Wes, Jesse and James running out of the casino as Rough Jake and his henchman were chasing them.

    “Get inside, quick!” Laura warned.

    Wes and his teammates did as they were told as they quickly got inside the car, with Wes quickly switching places with Laura, making Wes take the driver’s seat. “Huh? Why is Wes taking the wheel?” Rui asked.

    “Wes is a better risk taker than I am,” Laura replied.
    “Risk taker!?” James and Jesse yelled in unison in a scared tone.

    Wes harshly stepped on one of the pedals, driving the car at high speed, enough to make his teammates’ scream. But that didn’t stop Rough Jake as he took a car of his own and also drove at high speed, along with his henchmen.

    It wasn’t easy for Wes to drive at high speed, as he had to drive in different lanes and passing different vehicles, still he kept his cool. Jenny looked through the back window and saw the chasing car closing in. “They’re closing in on us, Wes!” she warned.

    “I see them,” Wes replied as he looked in the mirror at the side of the car.

    Jake’s car caught up with them as they drove to the left side of Laura’s car and one of Jake’s henchmen held a stick of dynamite and lit it up. “What? Dynamite?” James yelled. “I don’t want to be blasted off again!!”

    “Don’t worry,” Wes said confidently as he looked to his right, seeing another lane packed with different vehicles. “I thought of an idea.”

    Wes quickly drove to his right and managed to squeeze through small spaces that the cars on the road were making, much to his comrades’ surprise. “Wes! I never knew you could do that!” Rui yelled in amazement.
    “Plusle!” Plusle cried happily.
    “Is that your girlfriend, Wes?” Laura asked, which neither of them answered but they showed small blushes on their faces.

    Meanwhile, back at Jake’s car, his henchman was still holding the dynamite. “Throw it out the window!” Jake yelled in a scared and desperate tone. “Throw it out! Throw it out!”
    “But innocent people could be hurt,” his henchman replied innocently.
    “Yeah, it’ll send the wrong message to children,” his other henchman said.
    “What!?” Jake yelled in shock. “This fanfic’s PG to PG13!”

    Upon saying that, the dynamite exploded, making their clothes burnt and covering them with dirt. “You two owe me a new suit and hat!!” Jake yelled angrily.

    Back at Wes and the others, Wes made an immediate stop next to a pavement. “You guys okay?” Wes asked his teammates. They were taking deep heavy breaths upon having to be in the same car with the risk taker.

    “Yeah, we’re okay,” Rui replied with a small assuring smile.
    “Let’s get out of here then,” Wes said as he was about to drive away when suddenly Jake’s car drove in front of Laura’s car, much to Wes and his teammates’ shock.
    “Hey! Weren’t they behind us?” Laura asked.

    Before anyone could answer, Jake was driving his car straight at Laura’s and Wes quickly turned round and drove away while Jake gave chase. After some long chasing, they ended driving into a small alley, enough space to fit in two cars.

    Wes smiled confidently as he looked at a dead end wall. “Just a suggestion,” he said. “But those of you who doesn’t want me to smash into that wall, say ‘aye’”.

    Scared, everyone let out a big and long “AAAAAYYYYYYYEEEEE!”

    “The ‘ayes’ have it,” Wes said with a smirk as he quickly and harshly stepped on another pedal to make the car immediately stop. Although Wes stopped the car, Jake didn’t stop his as he continued driving and inadvertently drove passed Laura’s car and smashed his into the wall.

    “Well, what do you know,” Wes said, as the others stared at the smashed car in awe. “He fell for it.”

    He drove his car away and out of the alley, as the smashed car was no longer able to move.

    “That’s weird,” the henchman said, who was safely strapped to his seatbelt, so were the others. “The airbag didn’t go off.”
    “I don’t believe this!” Jake yelled stressfully as he banged the driving wheel. As he continued complaining, the airbag popped out of their respective compartments and squashed both Jake and his henchman, making them squirm and shouting out various things.

    Sometime later, Wes and the others made it outside the city. They decided to take a breather. Jesse and James were making some kebabs over a small campfire, Jenny was making a phone call and Rui couldn’t stop noticing Wes and Laura talking to each other, much to Plusle’s concern.

    Rui walked over to them, wanting to know what they’re talking about. “Hey, guys,” she said, catching their attention. “What’cha talking about?”
    “Just catching up on old times,” Wes replied.
    “So you two know each other?” Rui asked as she pointed at them.
    “Yeah, we used to be partners working for Team Snagem, nothing more than that,” Laura replied. “But then we decided to go our own ways.”
    “Oh, I see,” Rui said in an understanding sort of tone.
    “By the way…” Laura continued. “Wes has mentioned a lot about you.”
    “He has?” Rui asked with hopeful tone in her voice.
    “No, I haven’t,” Wes said, showing a small blush.

    “Sorry to break up the chatting,” Jenny said as she placed away her cell phone. “But who has the card?”

    “Oh yeah,” Wes said in realisation as he took the card out of his pocket. He then looked at his former partner in crime. “Now what do you mean when you said about the information behind this card?”

    Rui looked at the card that Wes was holding and spotted something. “Wait a minute,” she said as she took the card away from him, just before Laura was about to answer.

    She took a closer look and started to peel the card into two. “It’s another card!” Rui said in shock. Everyone gathered around her and looked at the other card, which a picture of the spaceship.

    “A spaceship?” Rui asked. “What’s this for?”
    “That’s all the information I can find,” Laura confessed. “The leader has some knack for hiding his plans.”
    “Good work, Rui” Wes said proudly as he placed his hand on Rui’s shoulder. “You’ve solved the puzzle.”
    “Thanks, Wes,” Rui replied happily.

    After a night’s rest, Laura and her friends decided to part ways. Each person shook Laura’s hand. When Wes was shaking hers, Laura said, “Take good care of her, Wes.”

    Wes smiled in response, which meant, “I will”.

    Upon leaving, James’s face showed that he forgotten something. “Wait! I forgot someone! Everyone!” he said excitedly as he took out his pokeball. “Meet Cacturne!”

    Cacturne became released from his pokeball once again, yelling out its name. It turned to look at his beloved trainer. “I think I owe you something,” James said happily as tears of joy came flowing out of his eyes. “Give me a hug!”

    As James and Cacturne gave each other a great big hug, James felt Cacturne’s thorns stinging his entire body as he let out a loud painful scream.

    “Ouch,” Wes said, noticing the pain.

    Next episode: Black Jack and his team meet three members of Team Dark who also claim to be also warriors of honour.
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